Original sentence: Deshpande (1912–1999), an Indian geographer, author, educationist, and writer.Nirmala Deshpande, Indian social activist and a Padmashri award winner (2005)
Edited sentence: Deshpande (1912–1999), an Indian geographer, author, a noted educationist, and writer.Nirmala Deshpande, a noted Indian social activist and a Padmashri award winner (2005)