Original sentence: , He described it as, “a more beautiful crypt than any I had ever seen abroad; the most satisfying example of church architecture in America., The cathedral nave would not see completion until 1976., The following year, at the age of twenty-one, he opened his own office in Pasadena., When the cathedral's construction progressed to the crossing and a crucial debate arose over whether to complete the nave or build the central tower next, Frohman's recommendation to proceed with the tower proved decisive
Edited sentence: He described it as, “a more beautiful crypt than any I had ever seen abroad; the most satisfying example of church architecture in America.The cathedral nave would not see completion until 1976.The following year, at the age of twenty-one, he opened his own office in Pasadena.When the cathedral's construction progressed to the crossing and a crucial debate arose over whether to complete the nave or build the central tower next, Frohman's recommendation to proceed with the tower proved decisive