Original sentence: Another notable change is to the character of Mark, who is altered from an Asian boy to an African American character with Ebonics added into his dialog.The most dramatic changes are to the main protagonist: his face and hairstyle are completely redesigned
Edited sentence: Another notable change is to the main protagonist: his face and hairstyle are completely redesigned.The most dramatic changes are to the character Masao, who was renamed "Mark", and, in addition to having his signature hat and makeup removed and replaced with a much more ordinary baseball cap, is changed from an Asian boy to an African American character with Ebonics added into his dialog