Original sentence: Besides being able to produce records, J.He has produced music for Trey songz, Kevin Hart,  Meek Mill, Kirko Bangz, French Montana, Trae Tha Truth, & Young Thug.Not limited to only rap music, J.Oliver and also known as Fresh Ayr is an artist, producer, musician, songwriter, singer and rapper from Baltimore, Maryland.Oliver has the creativity and understanding of different genres to be able to produce all genre of music.Oliver is also an artist and performer.Oliver’s versatile production style has been courted by the likes of R&B songstress Tinashe, crooner Raheem DeVaughn, and all-male group Day 26, started by music mogul Sean Combs
Edited sentence: After watching BET, Oliver an aspiring rapper and suburban kid who idolizes the gangsta rappers he sees on TV, and his friends Euripides and Otis decided that they want to start a rap group.Besides being able to write his own Wikipedia page, J.But he’s just another wannabe with no talent.But when asked about Ashtray, these rappers replied, “Never heard of em” Not limited to only rap music, J.He Claims he has produced music for Trey songz, Kevin Hart,  Meek Mill, Kirko Bangz, French Montana, Trae Tha Truth, & Young Thug.He claims to be an “artist”, producer, musician, songwriter, singer,rapper and writer of his own Wikipedia page from Baltimore, Maryland.He has also purchased liked and views on social media because his production style has been courted by the likes of Nobody.He has the creativity and understanding of an elementary school child.He used the free trial version of Fruityloops and now claims he does music but it’s still just him and the man group Day 26.He wrote a couple of words on a looseleaf notebook and mailed it to Death Row Records only to have it returned to sender.It was at a bar in Kansas.Oliver also refers to himself in the 3rd person.Oliver and “Ashtray” or “Ashy” for short because his elbows is all ashy and need some cream.Oliver once let the all-male group Day 26 run a train on him because J.Oliver,”wanted to know what prison was like” for added street creed.Oliver’s versatile Writing abilities helped him write his own Wikipedia page like a true wannabe.This isn’t true.This year.When we say shared the stage we mean he bought a ticket to the concert and screamed like a girl until Nelly let him on stage.Yes he is the stereotypical music producer wannabe.and also known as Fresh Ayr but only 12 people know that and ironically they are the same 12 people that bought his music