Original sentence: He doesn't want the fame and he would rather Sun-Jo be the youngest ever to summit.Peak and Sun-Jo also go through many troubles with the Chinese government throughout the book.Peak doesn't reach the summit, but rather watches Sun-Jo summit instead.Sun-Jo is six days older than Peak, so if they both summmited, Peak would get all the fame and money.The Chinese government kept trying to find them because they wanted to have the youngest person to summit.Then, he meets a boy his age named Sun-Jo, one of the sherpa's grandsons, who is very poor and supports his sisters.This book encompasses many values, such as teamwork, perciverience, truth, and true passion
Edited sentence: He doesn't want the fame and he would rather Sun-Jo be the youngest ever to summit, the reason being that sun-jo needs the money to pay for his and his sisters' education.Later, Peak doesn't reach the summit, but rather watches Sun-Jo summit instead.Later, Peak finds out that Sun- Jo is a sherpa, named Zopa's, grandson and is planning to summit Everest.Peak and Sun-Jo also go through many troubles with the Chinese government (including Captain Shek) throughout the book.Peak feels angry at sun-jo for not telling him of his plan to summit, because he thinks that he is trying to compete with peak.The Chinese government kept trying to find them because they want the glory of having a Chinese person be the youngest to summit, and therefore don't want Peak or sun-jo on the mountain.Then, Peak meets a boy his age named Sun-Jo, who is very poor and supports his sisters.This book encompasses many values, such as teamwork, perserverence, dedication, friendship, family, and kindness.peak and Sun-Jo are very close in age