分类：教育/科学-外语学习
问题：在读证明这样翻译可以吗？有不合适的地方希望大家指出来：兹证明李明 
有不合适的地方希望大家指出来： 兹证明李明，男，生于1986年12月21日，于2005年9月就读于商学院信息管理与信息系统专业，现为大四在读学生，如成绩合格，将于2009年7月毕业，并授予学士学位。 特此证明                                天津大学商学院                                 2009年2月18日                Study Certificate This is to certify that LiMing, male,有不合适的地方希望大家指出来： 兹证明李明，男，生于1986年12月21日，于2005年9月就读于商学院信息管理与信息系统专业，现为大四在读学生，如成绩合格，将于2009年7月毕业，并授予学士学位。 特此证明                                天津大学商学院                                 2009年2月18日                Study Certificate This is to certify that LiMing, male, born on 21 December, 1986, has been studying in Information Management and Information System in the School of Business of Tianjin University from September 2005 till now. He will complete four years’study. After he is going to complete all prescribed courses and pass all examinations, he will graduate in July 2009 and obtain his Bachelor Degree.                           School of Business                           Tianjin University                                    18/2/2009
回答：基本上得重写，简单改几个地方供参考。Study ertificate -> Certificate of Student Statusstudying in Information Management and Information System -> majoring in Information Management and Information Systemin the School of Business->at the Business Schoolfrom September 2005 till now->since September 2005He will complete four years’study. After he is going to complete all prescribed courses and pass all examinations, he will graduate in July 2009 and obtain his Bachelor Degree. -> As a senior at the school, he will graduate and be conferred the Bachelor's degree in July 2009 if he successfully passes all examinations.(“现为大四在读学生”漏翻)