分类：教育/科学-外语学习-英语考试
问题：我用英文简单的介绍了一下自己，请大家帮看看？？？Mynameis 
My name is dasha.I'm twenty year old.I work at XXX,I'm form in beijing.I was born on august 5。I enjoy playing football,baetball,listen to music,I enjoy listen to music the best.My favourite composer is huangjiaju.I want to be fashion designer.行吗？？？
回答：还是应该再修改一下：
My name is dasha.I'm twenty years （year一定要改成years) old.I work at XXX,I'm from (form 改成from,) beijing (in Beijing的in要去掉）.I was born on august 5th (5后面一定要加th)。I enjoy playing football,basketball,music (直接写music就好了，不用加listen to),I enjoy music (一样的，不用加listen to)  best (the best 和the应去掉）.My favourite composer is huangjiaju.I want to be a (fashion designer前一定要加a) fashion designer.