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问题：我翻译的,高手们帮我看一下有没有错误谢谢故事梗概：　　音乐梦幻剧 
故事梗概：　　 梦幻剧《马兰花》的故事取材于一段中国民间传奇：马兰山上有一朵马兰花，它充满神奇的力量、能满足人们的愿望。马兰山上住着一个英俊勇敢的青年马郎，他是马兰花的守护神。马兰山下有一对美丽的孪生姐妹大兰和小兰，姐妹俩都爱上了马郎。但最终大兰轻易丢弃了到手的幸福，而小兰用真心赢得了马兰花嫁给了马郎，快乐地生活在马兰山的动物王国里。森林阴暗势力老狼也时时窥视着马兰花，欲夺取马兰花主宰森林。他奸诈地化身为老猫，并利用大兰的妒嫉害死了小兰，逼迫大兰冒充小兰、夺走了马兰花、毁灭了马兰花。于是，围绕着这朵马兰花演绎出一幕幕神奇而动人的故事……故事梗概：　　 梦幻剧《马兰花》的故事取材于一段中国民间传奇：马兰山上有一朵马兰花，它充满神奇的力量、能满足人们的愿望。马兰山上住着一个英俊勇敢的青年马郎，他是马兰花的守护神。马兰山下有一对美丽的孪生姐妹大兰和小兰，姐妹俩都爱上了马郎。但最终大兰轻易丢弃了到手的幸福，而小兰用真心赢得了马兰花嫁给了马郎，快乐地生活在马兰山的动物王国里。森林阴暗势力老狼也时时窥视着马兰花，欲夺取马兰花主宰森林。他奸诈地化身为老猫，并利用大兰的妒嫉害死了小兰，逼迫大兰冒充小兰、夺走了马兰花、毁灭了马兰花。于是，围绕着这朵马兰花演绎出一幕幕神奇而动人的故事……Music Legend Play “Ma Lan Hua” was adapted from a Chinese folk legend. Long long ago on Ma Lan mountain boasted a Malan flower with supernatural power to make people's wishes come true. A handsome brave young saint named Malang was the guardian of the Ma lan flower. Under the mountain, there were two beautiful twin girls. One was called "DaLan" and the other was called "XiaoLan`". Both of them fell in love with Malang. DaLan always dreamed of luxurious life so she lightly gave up the chance for happiness. Xiao Lan won Malang's heart with her diligence and goodness（小兰用勤劳和善良赢得了马郎的心）. The couple got married and led a happy and harmonious life on the Ma Lan mountain with animals. On the mountain there was an evil Wolf who had long coveted “Malan flower" and wanted to master the flower so that it could carry out an evil scheme. The wicked wolf murdered Xiao Lan through by an insidious trick and engrossed the Malan flower. .Ma Lan saw through Wolf’s ruse and fought against it bravely .But the dying wolf destroyed the Ma Lan flower. Ma Lang buried the Ma Lan flower in the earth with animals and cried out for the renascence of the Ma lan flower with their soul. Eventually their behave moved sky-god. Ma Lan flower broke through the soil and blossomed out again. Xiao Lan was also reborn in the Ma Lan flower.The newly rehearsed Music Legend Play “Ma Lan Hua” is re-composed according to the former edition which was very popular and famous in the 50s. This new legendary play is directed by Su Leci , a renowned state-level director, who is a professor of the director apartment of Shanghai Theater Academy. The music was composed by Jin Puzai , a renowned state-level music composer ,who is a professor at the Shanghai conservatory of music. This play will be performed by the children’s art theatre of China Welfare Institute. The premiere will be staged at Shanghai Oriental Art Center - Opera Hall on September 14 2005. The highlight of the Music Legend Play “Ma Lan Hua”is a blend of Chinese culture, magical effects and modern fashion, This play is full of imagination and creativity.前半部分基本是按照故事梗概翻译的，某些与中文意思不符的内容是由公司老总定夺。请高手帮我看看是否有错误，地道与否，谢谢。我吃不准的地方用中文加以说明。
回答：1.Long long ago on Ma Lan mountain bsted a Malan flower with supernatural power to make people's wishes come true.改为:Longlongago,ontheMaLanMountain, pernatural一般指超自然的,而是一种魔力。2。young saint?在这里改为 a handsome young man。 guardian本来就是守护神的意思。3。马兰山下应该是at the foot of the mountain. underthe mountain给人感觉是在山的底下，难道又要发生劈山救母的故事？4。Under the mountain, there were two beautiful twin girls. One was called "DaLan" and the other was called "XiaoLan`". 这句不如直接改为：At the foot of the mountain, there were two beautiful twin girls, Dalan and XiaoLan.5.DaLan always dreamed of luxurious life so she lightly gave up the chance for happiness. Xiao Lan won Malang's heart with her diligence and goodness改为：However, Dalan always dreamed of luxurious life and lightly gave the happiness at hand, while Xiaolan finally won Malang's heart with her diligence and kindness.5....so that it could carry out an evil scheme.改为：。。。so that it could help him to carry out his evil scheme.6.The wicked wolf murdered Xiao Lan through by an insidious trick and engrossed the Malan flower.改为：The wicked wolf took advantage of Dalan's jealousy and murdered Xiao Lan in the form of a cat.7. Ma Lang buried the Ma Lan flower in the earth with animals马郎把马兰花和动物们葬在了一起？不对吧？Malang and the animals buried Malan Flower in the earth8.with their soul改为with their souls.9.Eventually their behave moved sky-god改为：Eventually, they moved the god in the heaven.10.Ma Lan flower broke through the soil and blossomed out againMalan flower bursted out of the soil and bloomed again.11.Xiao Lan was also reborn in the Ma Lan flower他不是重新出生而是复活。Xiao Lan also revived in the Malan Flower.12Jin Puzai :是不是Jin Fuzai?(金复载）第二段翻译还是不错的。