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Your prompt restatement is highly confusing to understand. Only a single prompt was provided for this writing but, you are responding in 3 different ways. Responses based on varying prompts make this paragraph impossible to understand. Is it:  
  
- I agree that technology has a bad effect (direct response to agree or disagree)  
- but if used properly ( discuss both points of view and give your opinion )  
- advantages outweigh the downsides ( Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? )  
  
As you can see, the reader shall be confused by your writing. You deviated from the undisclosed original topic several times. Which is the real prompt you are responding to ? This unclear opinion and TA approach will have a failing effect on your score.
***Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. however, the damaged tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored.***  
  
## to what extend do you agree or disagree?

  
  
Tourism has become one of the fastest growing industry in the the last decade. Although it has a major impact on world economy, this issue has raised another concern regarding to environmental and cultural damaged. Personally, I agree with this statement because of two reasons.  
  
For the main reason, human activity tends to bring many negative impacts to the natural destination such as mountain. People have to consume their basic needs while travelling in remote areas. This means that they must bring some instant foods or beverages during the vacation, and in fact this results some trashes or residues. Hiking, for instance, is a sport tourism that at least needs two days. It matters for hikers to carry food supply, but they often override rule not to produce trashes in the mountain. As an effect, many package of human-consumed is found in the mountain.  
  
In addition, tourists tend to bring their character that may challenge domestic norms and believes. This could be a sensitive issue because the local wisdom could be altered by the tourist massive interaction. Moreover, local society identity may vanish. Bali is one of the brief example of this issue. Nowadays, some of Balinese cultural festival has changed from its original such as Kecak Dance. If their ancestor used this dance as religious expression, nowadays, its purpose has changed to attract tourist. Furthermore, this is a sign that believes has disappeared and local society has started lose their character.  
  
In conclusion, the damage of tourism in both environment and culture is a real issue. This happens because human concern to fulfill their basic needs and the degradation of local believes or norms.
Tourism has become one of the fastest growing industry  
This is practically a complete cut and paste of the original prompt. She section is evidence that you can only write in memorized or copied phrases. This will contribute to a failing TA score.  
  
~~last decade~~  
No time reference is made in the original prompt. This misinforms the reader and changes the original information. Do not include unsupported information.  
  
cultural damaged  
Improper word use. Damage indicates ongoing action. Happening or continuing to happen in present time. Damaged means the action has ended. It is in the past.LR and GRA reductions apply.  
  
I agree with this statement  
To what extent ? Deliver the response based on the prompt format. Failure to do so will add to your TA reduction based on improper response format.  
  
two reasons.  
Incomplete thesis statement. Summarize the 2 supporting reasons as the end sentence/s for this paragraph to increase your C + C baseline score.  
  
human activity  
Relate this to and use the word travel in reference to it for sentence clarity.  
  
trashes  
Improper word usage. Trash is both the singular and plural form of the word. GRA deductions apply.  
  
believes  
Correct word is "belief" which means ; an opinion or conviction. LR issue.  
  
society identity  
Should be using the plural form for both words ( societies identities) as every nation has several local cultures/ identities to refer to. LR and GRA related errors.  
  
In conclusion,  
Good but incomplete summary. you need to repeat your extent opinion here as the closing sentence.
## travelers destinations - four cities in Europe

  
  
The bar chart illustrates the estimated number of visitors from three different realms to four places including Roma, Marid, Paris, and Liverpool in the year 2008.  
  
It is clear that while Marid is expected to be the most attractive destination, the opposite is true for Liverpool. In addition, visitors from the USA account for the highest number in four different regions.  
  
As can be seen from the chart, 100 thousand tourists coming from the USA is expected to visit Marid, compared with only 80 and around 70 thousand ones from Canada and Mexico respectively. In contrast, there is a downward trend in the number of visitors to Liverpool in 2008. Particularly, the number of American travelers stands at around 50 thousand, which is twice as many as that of Canadian ones, at only 25 thousand. The estimated figure for Mexico is much lower; just only 18 thousand tourists.  
  
Regarding the remaining cities, 80 thousand American travelers is predicted to pay a visit to Rome, followed by around 50 thousand visitors from Canada. Meanwhile, the predicted figure for visitors from Mexico is just one-quarter of America's travelers. In addition, the figure for tourists paying a visit to Paris is expected to be equal, over 50 thousand from each country.  
  
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The bar chart illustrates  
You are not making any reference to the number of bars. The number of bars relate to specific countries as you indicated in the summary. Always summarize related data collectively.  
  
100 thousand  
Use the real numerical reference-100,000 or 100 K.  
  
the predicted figure  
That is an actual, not predicted figure since it had already been established in 2018.  
  
Your presentation just encountered some summary issues due to a little developed summary. This is related to a lack of draft and outline development. While the paragraphs are informative enough, the analysis could use more comparison points. Varied punctuation and numerical presentations would have also brought you a better GRA score.
## ***The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.***

  
  
The two maps illustrate the development in the layout of a university campus in the years 2010 and now.  
  
Overall, it is clear that the campus has increased in both size and quality. Several supplementary innovations accompany student facilities.  
  
Initially, along the road from northeast to southwest, there was a university offices building opposite a teaching block which was used in art and science educating, a skyscraper of student accommodation, and a lake with lawn and seating area. To the south of this area was another student accommodation whilst to the south where a row of shops and a restaurant.  
  
Currently, the university offices and teaching block are eradicated to make ways for a science construction and an art building respectively. The southern student accommodation now has been transferred to right next to the other one. In place of that, shops and restaurant are included in the student facilities building. The lake remains its original site but the vicinal lawn and seating area is demolished. A new road to the southeast of the lake is constructed and used to access a new student accommodation.  
  
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I can't upload the images because of the size  
The images are in: ielts-exam.net/academic\_writing\_samples\_task\_1/1121/  
Sorry for this inconvenient!
and now.  
Indicate the present year instead to refer to present day. That creates a clear reference to the data in the prompt and shows tou know how to use alternate refetences properly.  
  
Overall, it is clear  
You summarized the trend well enough to show you analyzed and compared the images.  
  
Initially  
Incorrect word usage. The correct term is previously as you are referring to the old image. This lacks reference clarity.  
  
eradicated  
Wrong word usage. Say replaced instead. Though eradicated means removed, it is not the same in meaning as replaced.  
  
Your essay has problems with vocabulary usage and clarity due to incorrect vocabulary presentation. Work on properly building your vocabulary.  
  
Sorry for this inconvenient!  
You violated forum rules by not uploading the image and forcing the educational consultant to access an exterior link. Last warning before account ban !  
  
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## students expenditures analysis

  
  
The chart below show what senior high school students in 3 different high schools (Beaufort, Westmont and Whitford) spent their money on in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.  
  
The pie chart illustrated what seniors in Beaufort, Westmont and Whitford High School invested on in 2005.  
Overall, students of the 3 schools had quite different preference in money spending yet they were all interested in 5 categories: Gaming, Clothing, Music, Movies and Food.  
  
Of the 5 categories, Video games took up the largest proportion of spending by students of all 3 schools: Westmont's students spent a quarter of their total expenses on this activity; Beaufort's students spent 3% more than the Westmont, and about 32% was invested by Whitford's seniors. Watching movies was popular among last-year students of both Beaufort and Westmont (which took up 22% and 28% respectively), while significantly less money was spent on this leisure activity by the Whitfords. Similarly, Beaufort and Westmont students spend a total of 50% of their year's expenditure for eating, yet this category only receive 10% money from students of Whitford.  
  
On the contrary, approximately one-fifth was invested on clothing by Whitford's seniors whilst less than 20% was dedicated to this area by both Beaufort's and Westmont's students. In the category of music, Beaufort's seniors seemed to have spent the least (8%) but students attending Whitford and Westmont High School spent over 20% (Westmont) and up to 28% (Whitford) for this particular activity.  
  
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The chart below  
3 different high schools  
Your image reference is incorrect. Assuming that the reader can see the images provided, it will be clear to him that your statement is misleading for 2 reasons:  
  
- There are 3 images presented instead of one.  
- The chart is not properly identified. It is a pie chart, not just a chart.  
  
Your preliminary information is inaccurate. The trending statement is good enough to clarify any potential missing information though. Good presentation save.  
  
The actual report is one of the better presentations I have read here. Your report is creative in terms of related C + C and GRA presentations. It avoids any LR issues and in pretty much clear to the reader in terms of specific C + C requirements. The only real problem I see is in the TA section in relation to image identification and number of images.
The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.  
  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  
  
The chart illustrates the figures of five cities in Australia in terms of the habit of the citizen in purchasing and consuming coffee or tea. Overall, throughout four weeks, spending time at a café seemed to be the most popular option among all, while buying fresh coffee was not very preferable, peaking at the bottom for all of the five cities.  
  
It is readily apparent that people in five chosen cities tend to have a habit of going outside for coffee or tea, as the percentages of that remain the highest in four out of five cities, reaching a peak of nearly 65% in Melbourne whereas being relatively high in Sydney and Hobart with approximately 61% and 63%, respectively. At the same time, the trend was not recorded in Adelaide, which just slightly below 50% of the people enjoy having their drinks at a coffee shop, being surmounted by the choice of buying instant coffee and coming at the second-highest option. Adelaide was the only city where purchasing instant coffee was the most chosen choice among all with 50%, as it always comes at the second-highest in other cities.  
  
In contrast, purchasing fresh coffees was the least frequent choice among the people being surveyed, as it hit the bottom of the chart for all of the given cities, which the lowest percentage being noted was under 35% in both Adelaide and Brisbane. A similar pattern was also spotted in other cities, in which the percentage of people buying their own coffee ranged from nearly 43% to slightly under 45% in Sydney and Melbourne, respectively. In Hobart, the recorded number was still relatively low, staying at below 40%.  
  
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The chart  
Do not just copy the image definition from the instruction. That is how you end up mis-identifying the image. You have to be more definitive than that. It is a series of bar charter. Not just a bar chart, which is singular in description while the image refers to a plural reference. By the way, you forgot to specify the cities as indicated in the measurement chart.  
  
65% in Melbourne whereas  
You need a comma here to show a related, but different topic transition.  
  
You did a good job of analyzing and comparing the given data. the statements are directly analytical without going overboard. It is clear enough to the reader although, a few additional punctuation marks such as a comma or period may have helped to increase reference clarity.
The line graph illustrates the amount of four different types of food which consumed in a European country from 1979 to 2004.  
Overall, fish was spent the least in the European country. Also, the expediture on beef, fish, lamb decreased, while there was a flactuately increase in chicken consumption.  
  
In 1979,the cosumption of beef was spent the highest in four differents food, at 220 gram person per week. In the same year, the figuer for beef and lamb used lower at under 150 gram and exactly 150 gram respectively. The amount of fish was the lowest number with only 50 gram eaten.  
  
In the period from 1979 to 2004,the spending on chicken increased constantly and reached the highest point 250 gram in 2003. By contrast, fish consumption remained almost unchange until 1989 and declined to only 40 gram for the rest of period. Although the amount of beef reached a peak of 240 gram in 1983, this dropped steadily to just 100 gram in the year 2004. There was a fall the consumption of lamb, at around 50 gram.
European country  
Wasn't the country specifically mentioned?  
  
from 1979 to 2004.  
This is good. It can be improved further by adding a number of years or decades + years reference to create a comprehensive analysis.  
  
expediture  
Expenditure refers to money spent. That is not the same as consumed wwhich refers to food or goods used without renewal. This is an LR problem.  
  
was spent  
Please make up your mind. Was the food bought or eaten? Edit your summary accordingly.  
  
Your essay lacks clarity and coherence. You cannot decide if this about money spent or food eaten. This confusion will bring you railing GRA and C + C scores. Your essay will not get a passing mark.  
  
\* Limited iview due to lack of image.
zim.vn/giai-de-thi-that-ielts-writing-task-1-dang-line-chart/  
This is my writing based on the test on the link above and my level is around 5.5 to 6.0.Please send my some comments and feedbacks,thanks so much.  
  
## car ownership in the uk

  
  
The line graph illustrates the percentage of people who owned cars in Britain over the period of 30 years.  
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there was a significant upward trend in the amount of 2 and 3 cars ownership while the number of people had no car experienced a sharp decline over the period has been shown. Additionally, there was no change in that of people owned 1 car.  
  
It is obvious that the proportion of those in the UK had 1 car maintained unchanged from 1975 to 2005, despite a substantial fall by around 7% in 1985. The figure for people had no car plummeted over 10 years, followed by a stable drop in the next 20 years, at approximately 20% in total.  
  
On the other hand, it can be seen from the graph that the percentage of those owned 2 cars increased dramatically 8% between 1975 and 1985, at which point this figure started to climb gradually in 1985. There was a steady rise in the amount of 3 cars ownership over 30 years, from 3% to nearly 10%.
zim.vn/giai-de-thi-that-ielts-writing-task-1-dang-line-chart/  
Upload the image next time. you are currently in violation of forum rules regarding image access. You have been warned. A user ban will be next if you continue to violate forum rules.  
  
period of 30 years.  
Inclusive of? Summarize the dates and other information. This paragraph is incomplete and lacking information. There is more information than this highlight in the image. How was the graph divided ? Into what groups?  
  
What was the best trend reference?  
  
Your paragraphs are not showing a proper and complete analysis. That is done using 3-5 sentence ppresentations per paragraph.  
  
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## Two maps clearly illustrate that Dubai has changed significantly within the past 10 years.

  
In particular, 10 years ago at the upper side of the traffic circle, there were only a few bungalows and apartments; in contrast to the concrete jungle full of highrises, which has been seen nowadays. Buildings and skyscrapers at the top of which, some advertisements have been installed, have also modernized. In addition, the roads have been congested with a number of cars due to the larger population. What is more, all the trees and plants along the street were uprooted. However, the Clock Tower Roundabout has been surrounded by some new trees, allowing Dubai to be less poisonous.  
  
According to two maps, the Clock Tower and the route have not changed in Dubai through 10 years. They still remain the same as they always were. It's evidence that the structure of multi-directional roads is so special until the present.  
  
To summarize, Dubai has developed dramatically in most fields within a decade, which provides dwellers' lives both amenities and problems.
TWO MAPS CLEARLY ... PAST 10 YEARS.  
Why did you capitalize this sentence? This should be typed using regular fonts. Did you mean to use this as a title? That is not required in any IELTS writing task. next time, write naturally.  
  
Your paragraphs need to be uniform in length. Anywhere from 3-5 sentences (maximum). Describe the first 5 years in paragraph 2, then the most recent 5 years in paragraph 3. As this is a report essay instead of an opinion presentation, you need not present a summary at the end. That is a task 2 requirement.  
  
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## IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TRAFFIC / TRANSPORT

  
  
**Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and government should encourage some businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Does advantage outweigh the disadvantages?**  
  
It is true that traffic and accommodation problems riddled with endless struggles and mistakes are experiencing a trend of escalating inexorably. It is suggested that government should encourage some businesses to leave densely populated areas and start their new enterprises in less crowded areas. I, however, strongly believe that the potential advantages do not overweigh the disadvantages because of concern about productivity and efficiency.  
  
Moving to the rural areas is tantamount to new shifts in discovering a distinctive and fruitful market in order to offer a chance for the marketing and promotion. Clearly, when expanding horizons, companies tend to leave their own safe zones and have valuable opportunities to sell products, exchange empirical knowledge and upgrade their reputations among certain areas. Additionally, there will be a substantial triumph in industries and economics if enterprises succeed in advertising their products. Chief among these, it ensures the cooperation of communities as more people realize that not all businesses are run with the sole purpose of making as much profit as possible for their owners. As a result, it would form an intimate connector between city dwellers and residents in countryside, thus leading to satisfaction and long-lasting compromising.  
  
Notwithstanding, leaving their own home and hiding apart from issues in traffic and accommodation to settle down businesses in less densely populated areas could not be perceived as a plausible method because government should lavish more insights and reverences on tackling the current problems. Firstly, not all companies should be encouraged to relocate. Tobacco companies epitomize their harmful products pointing at consumers so introducing these types of companies to the press not only create more troubles but also deteriorate general living standard. Secondly, when there is a vast majority of businesses move to the countryside, it will be rapidly industrialized and ended up crowded areas. Again, there would be traffic and accommodation problems in countryside rather the old cities that had been abandoned by their government. Thirdly, it is not the matter of the rural areas' features compared to the threats in pollution. To be more specific, changing locations is inextricably tied to concomitant waste discharged from some companies catering human needs such as agricultural pesticides.  
  
In conclusion, moving to the rural areas may be a great initiative in some cases, but it needs foremost consideration from all possible aspects.
Your first paragraph sentence does not make any sense as a topic restatement. It is confusing for an ENL to read as there is no way to understand the meaning of the sentence. Keep it simple. Don't just use advanced words that do not apply to the presentation. You will get a failing mark when your essay has no sense of logic and understanding.  
  
less crowded areas  
These are not the same as rural areas, also known as provinces, regions, prefectures...  
  
potential advantages do not overweigh the disadvantages  
What reference point led to this opinion? Lead into this with a starting reference from the original discussion. This is another sentence that lacks clarity.  
  
because of concern about productivity and efficiency.  
At least you have solid and clear thesis statement references. Good job!  
  
You tend to focus more on vocabulary usage and word count rather than clear content writing and everyday English word usage. You do not score better when writing wordy essays that do not apply itself to a simple writing task. This is just an opinion paper, not a thesis or dissertation meant for peer review. Concentrate on making the reader understand a simple opinion based on simple reasons. That is how you get a better overall score. Your current presentation has so many errors ranging from TA to GRA that I am not confident about your final score.