dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
Hi. Here are my suggestions for you.  
  
... that appearance of other people is ~~the~~an essential clue to ...  
Meanwhile, another **says** we cannot (...) from **looking** their cover. I believe that **the** first impression to ...  
However**(,)** it cannot become absolute ...  
  
~~People~~ when **they** meet other persons in**the** first time**, people** put their feeling ...  
The ~~conclusion~~**impression** about their characteristic k  
... first impression when ~~i~~**I** met my boyfriend. ~~From~~ the clothes that he wore ~~which~~**look** like a bad boy.  
  
It **is** because this apparel not always **presents** a real character ...  
Appearance is not **an** absolute marking toward**s** someone. Taking **the** same example like ...  
  
... I believe that **the** first impression about someone **emerges** from first seeing ...  
  
Suggestion: try to re-state your main idea in the last sentence but in the different phrase or sentence. so it can emphasise the idea that you have mentioned before.  
  
I hope it can be helpful for you.  
Goodluck and Keep Spirited.
**Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear**  
  
Clothes are important thing for everyone. It is become need of people, wherever they go and whenever clothes that they are wear as the point or symbol of them. Actually, using clothes as a sign of professionalism for their job or they are enjoy and like about their fashion. Some people argue that clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like, and others argue, people should not be judge by clothes they wear. This essay will discuss about that.  
  
In the present, many fashionable clothes that sell, people usually buy expensive or cheap clothes because they are like. It is based on their level in live. Some people have view about expensive clothes, just for high level such as celebrity, government, businessman/business women or reach people. And cheap clothes for people who have standard level like employees. It can say that, people wear are clothes as the indication what they are like. For example usually, celebrities are wearing luxury clothes which design by famous designer. It is occur because their like and help them to show their performance to make their fans happy and enjoy when look at them. Clothes become initial and the mirror of them about life style.  
  
On the other hand, some people argue that, we should not judge people by their clothes which wear. Because, some people are just wearing something to show their professionalism and they have different favorite fashion with others. Unfortunately, humans usually judge people which wear bad fashion or style. For example, a player music who wear punk style, for others it is not good as a public figure who have fans, because many people will follow their style and bring negative effect for other such as students or children. They are like music and sometimes having obsession to follow style their favorite artist like punk style. We cannot judge people by clothes they are wear, because it is sometime to support his appearance, we should look at they are behavior or habits with their fans, not their style or clothes they are wear.  
  
In conclusion, people usually wear clothes what they are like, but we cannot always consider what they wear, because they just display their ability and skills to supporting their performance.
Hi Miss Resky. Here are my suggestions for you.  
  
Clothes are important *thing**(you should avoid to use the "thing". consider to change to the more specific one)* for everyone. It is ~~become need~~needed(use the passive form) of people,(...) that they are ~~wear~~**worn** as the point or ...  
  
... professionalism for their job or ~~they are~~ enjoy and like ...  
... people should not be ~~judge~~**judged** by clothes they wear. This essay will discuss ~~about~~ that.  
  
... fashionable clothes that ~~sell,~~ people usually buy **are** expensive *or cheap clothes because they are like **(?)***. It is based on their level in ~~live~~**life**. Some people ~~have~~**only** view ~~about~~ expensive clothes~~,~~ just for high level (...)business women or ~~reach~~**rich** people.  
  
... people who have **high** standard level like employees. ~~It~~**I** can say that~~,~~ people**'s****dress**~~wear are clothes as the indication~~**indicates** what they are like.  
  
... clothes which design**ed** by **the** famous designer.  
  
Suggestions:  
try to make a clear sentence with clear subject and clear verb. then after that, you can try to learn how to make complex sentence.  
  
Here are the links that can be useful for you:  
  
grammarbook.com/grammar/subjectVerbAgree.asp  
  
and here is the easiest one:  
webapps.towson.edu/ows/moduleSVAGR.htm  
  
Goodluck and Keep Spirited.
It ~~is~~ become need of people  
  
1) is + become : DOUBLE VERB  
  
Actually, using clothes as a sign of professionalism for their job ...  
(nyatanya, edited - only English is allowed here )  
  
2) You look like make incomplete sentence -\_\_\_\_-". Try this :  
  
**Actually, people usually use clothes as a sign of professionalism for their job or just for enjoy it.**  
  
... of what they are like, ~~and~~**BUT** others argue, people should not be judge by clothes THAT they wear  
  
3) Show contradiction ! You cannot use "AND" but use "BUT"  
  
4) Add linking words !  
  
~~This essay will discuss about that.~~  
  
5) IT'S NOT NECESSARY. Actually you don't mention about your personal view in the overview. You should mention if you agree / disagree / tend to be agree / tend to be disagree. DON'T FORGET TO MENTION IT IN THE FIRST PARAGRAPH.  
  
In the present, ~~many fashionable clothes that sell,~~**There are many fashionable clothes that sell in many shops.**.  
... or cheap clothes because ~~they are like.~~ they like it.  
  
6) many fashionable clothes that sell, *(and what the rest of this sentence? you don't explain it well)*  
  
7) They + are + like ---> Pronoun + be + like is verb, ----> They like it =====> Subject + Verb + Object  
  
I don't finished it yet, so please EVERYBODY, continue my correction :D
Aloha Reski here are my thoughts;  
  
(1) ~~Clothes are important thing for everyone.~~ (I think you'd better use casual hook to attract readers read more. Here is my sample hook;clothing is one of the trends in these days )  
  
(2) ~~It is become need of people, wherever they go and whenever ...~~ (you can make it simple and easy to understand. Here is my sample;Therefore, some people wear clothes for signing their job, hobby, or status )  
  
(3) ~~Actually, using clothes as a sign of professionalism for their job or ...~~(I think you do not need this sentence)  
(4) ... are the most important ~~indication~~to indicate~~of~~ what they are like, ~~and~~while others argue, people should not be ~~judge~~judged by clothes they wear.  
  
(5) This essay will discuss about ~~that~~these views .  
(6) I think your body paragraph is out of topic, because I did not find the correlation of task response  
  
I am waiting for your feedback, keep writing
Hi ReskiRamadhani88,  
  
Here's my note for your first paragraph:  
  
- Clothes are the important thing for everyone. --->don't forget to use article after mentioning the subject.  
- Clothes are important thing for everyone. ---> avoid unclear word, you can utilize "goods or stuff"  
- It is become need of people ---> "need" is verb and you must write noun on it "needs".  
  
it's confusing.  
- wherever they go and whenever clothes that they are ...  
- Actually, using clothes as a sign of professionalism for their ...  
- Some people argue that clothes people wear are the most important indication ... ---> be careful with your compound sentence.  
  
Break a leg!
Hello eki! I will give you some opinions about your essay.  
  
(1) Clothes are important ~~thing~~**item** for everyone.  
(2) It is become need**s**~~of~~**for most** people,  
(3) ... clothes that they ~~are~~ wear as ~~the point or~~**a** symbol ~~of~~**for** them.  
(4) Actually, using clothes as a sign of professionalism ...  
***People usually using certain dress to impress the other, such as to show their professionalism or just to keep up to date about fashion***  
(5) ... that clothes **that** people wear are the ... --> *Try to change the structure sentence or paraphrase the question*  
  
(6) In the present, many fashionable clothes that sell, people ...  
***Nowadays, there are many fashionable clothes that are made by famous designer and some people always spend their money on it, whether the price is cheap or expensive.***  
  
(7) It is based on their level in live. Some people [....]l and the mirror of them about life style.  
*I know it is hard to do, but you have to emphasize your sentence about why people want to impress others by their cloth worn. For example, **because some people want to get an opulent lifestyle than the other who cannot afford the expensive clothing***
***Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indicator of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should no be judged by the clothes they wear.***  
  
Fashion industries now spread and more develop than before. They exist in almost all media that people can notice clearly. People are offered by any form and stylish garments. Nevertheless, most of them only buy the fashion product that they like and I believe what kind of dresses people use, do not reflect what character they have.  
  
The kinds of clothes sometimes do not make people become lavish to spend their money buying it. Because the fashion items that contemporary popular are not their style. Many people collect some garments based on their desiring and favorite. For instance, in recent year, palazzo pants more likely to use by some hijabers, especially popular hijabers, but I do not attract to buy the clothes like that and keep continue buying dress. Because, it is not my style, and it is true that we can say that people's fashion style depend on their delight to something, such as color, shape, and convenience.  
  
Fashion styles of people do not reflect their personality. We may judge a woman is so feminine and soft by a dress she uses. But, we do not know her character until we are making friends with her. Sometimes, people use garment just for duty and situation and to be obligated by someone like her boss. The enjoyable dresses people use, do not reflect their behavior and social status. Because, we often see the rich uses a simple fashion and the poor wears a high-class-look-like clothes. Sometimes clothes deceive our eyes and waste our brain  
  
To sump up, we may judge people's fashion styles as something they interest to, but it does not mean that their clothes reflect their characters. Since wearing particular clothes frequently, hinder our eyes from the real personality of people. 293w
**Hello, Miss Anha :)**  
Let's discuss about your essay :)  
  
Overall, I can enjoy the flow of your passages. But, actually, I feel that your introduction paragraph has missed the point of what the statements asked. I think you do not focus on the problem of how people perspective towards others by their clothes wear . You give additional or new statements and due to of that your body 1 and 2 being influenced too.  
  
***People are offered by any form ... Nevertheless, most of them only buy the fashion product that they like and I believe what kind ...*** => *Based on your statements, I think you do not explain about people perspectives towards other and you just directly give your opinion statements :)* ... **Please, corrected me if I wrong understand your mean exactly :)**  
  
**Hope it help you :) Keep Writing and Good Luck :)**
**Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.  
  
Writing Task 2, Unit 8D, Page 52**  
  
Some people think that the clothes, which is worn by them, is the most essential factors to impress someone else. Others think that it is not true because people cannot judge by what they wear. In my opinion, it depends on the situation that the clothes has its particular function to make others feel admire.  
  
With regards to some people who agree with the notion of the importance of clothes worn, they generally believe that it can make a fresh look or smart one, particularly in a workplace. For instance, according to the result of survey reveals that people, who want to get interview in a company, tend to wear dress smartly with bright shirt, nice tie and formal suit. As a result, their appearance look more diligent and more confident. Therefore, it is necessary to choose clothes carefully for some people in certain occasion.  
  
On the other hand, some society think that others cannot judge someone' appeal through their clothes. It is because not everybody has the same economical issue and affords to buy branded clothes or nice clothing. For example, people who have limited finance only use casual clothes which is affordable, but it does not mean that they are not a smart person. As a result, their dress look cannot describe much information about their mind or behave.  
  
In conclusion, the notion of clothes worn is important to impress other people is true, especially for some people who want to attend formal activity. However, it does not valid for everyone who wear simple dress as their appearance. (260 words)
Hello Asep, I have some suggestions to you  
  
Some people think that the clothes , which is worn ...  
... the situation that the clothes has its particular ...  
  
... of the importance of clothes worn, they generally ...  
... necessary to choose clothes carefully for some ...  
  
... appeal through their clothes .  
... and affords to buy branded clothes or nice clothing.  
... the notion of clothes worn is important to ...  
  
**You doing repetition too much with clothes. You should change this into FABRIC / GARMENT / SUIT / MENSWEAR AND WOMANSWEAR**  
  
Overall is good essay, you can use one idea paragraph correctly and it make your coherence better.
Hi Miss Septi. Here are my suggestions for you.  
  
1. ... clothes, which ~~is~~are worn by them, ~~is~~are the most essential ...  
==> the verb should be singular because the subject is the singular one.  
  
2.  
  
Others think that it is not true because people cannot judge by what they wear  
==> people cannot be judged by what they wear.  
  
3. that people~~(,)~~ who want to get interview in a company~~(,)~~  
  
4.  
  
about their mind or behave.  
their mind or behaviour  
  
5.  
  
make others feel admire.  
"feel" is linking verb and it should be followed by adjective/noun/adverb. you can change the word "admire" to **"admired"**  
  
I hope it can be useful for you.  
Goodluck and Keep Spirited.
**Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.**  
  
Education is a pivotal key to conquer the world. There is no doubt that entering children to study at school is essential way to get overall educational and social experiences, whilst it is believed that homeschooling provides what children needs regarding their own interest. Even though both views are entirely true to some extent, I firmly believe that all of the notions have upsides that should be taken into consideration to improve child's developments.  
  
Needless to say, learning at school offers children to get more knowledge and learn how to get on with each other. A study of Utrecht University in 2015 found that children who sent to school are more likely to explore their whole potential so that they can achieve good academic performances. In addition, they tend to have good intrapersonal skills as they interact with others from diverse background which can lead to succeed in the society. Nevertheless, statistics reveals that many parents are not satisfied with local schools due to serious school violence. This means that some parents decide to educate their children at home by controlling them directly.  
  
Apart from previous discussion, homeschooling gives the best way to respond children's needs with their pace. By doing so, these homeschoolers can get much faster progress because its concept allows them to learn one-to-one lessons. TIMSS (Trends in International Mathematics and Science Study) reported in 2014 that children who take homeschooling has successfully gained higher score in mathematics and science Olympiad for a decade compared by children from public schools. On the other hand, it seems that homeschooling only focuses on children's development, yet there is no alteration for them to socialize with their peers.  
  
The aforementioned evident shows that schools can maximize child's potentials to broaden their horizon both educational and social skills. However, it is believed that homeschooling concept are created to teach children getting faster progress regarding their needs. **(317 words)**
Hello Mr. @abangabul93 :)  
Here are few of my corrections for you :)  
  
Education is a pivotal key to **conquer=> conquering** the world.  
  
Apart from **('USING ARTICLE "THE")** previous discussion, ...... ..who take homeschooling **has =>have** successfully gained ...  
  
... homeschooling concept**are=> is** created to teach children ...  
  
**Overall, I think your essay already good and clear enough :) .  
Keep Writing :)**
**Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.**  
  
Clothes have developed in this modern era and they have been a fashion for many people. Appearance is very significant information about people's interest while sometimes it can be perception how people think about someone else. However, I think fashion is essential to predict people's life, but it is not absolutely true.  
  
Various fashion styles that people have used in the century. From fashion, people know which clothes people like and it can be caused by financial condition. The rich usually wear luxury and branded product because they have much money to buy expensive clothes when the poor only wear standard clothes. Even they have same fashion mode, wealthy people certainly love higher class fashion than the poor. For instance, legislation council and farmer want to buy white t-shirt. And the result is so different in quality. Therefore, people's styles is indicate what they interest and it can be influenced by another factor.  
  
Many reasons why people like trendy clothes or juts simple cothes happen today. It is hard to know that they are rich or not. For instance, Bill Gates always worn black long hand t-shirt while they published his product or had conference in from of people. It does not mean that he does not have enough money to buy expensive clothes. It is happen because he loves simple clothes. However, people should not underestimate people based on their fashion style, because sometimes it is opposite what we are thingking about.  
  
All in all, people prefer to wear clothes that they like but it does not mean they are bad in financial. However, in my opinion, fashion is an art so it cannot be a tools for judging someone.
**Hello, Mr. Mardian :)  
Let me give you some corrections :)**  
Here are few of my corrections for you :)  
  
... like trendy clothes or juts simple**cothes => clothes** happen today.  
..., Bill Gates always **worn=> wore** black long hand t-shirt ...  
It is **happen=> happening** because he loves simple clothes.  
... opposite what we are **thingking=>thinking** about.  
  
... so it cannot be**a tools =>tools** for judging someone.  
  
**Keep Writing and Good Luck :)**
**The chart below show the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationships with their supervisors and their co-workers.  
  
Writing Task 1, Unit 7D, Page 46**  
  
The breakdown of the information about the bond of employees with their supervisor and their co-workers are compared in pie charts. It is measured in the percentage, in 2005 and 2009. Overall, the most obvious facts that is the correspondent gave the largest figure of 'very good' answer in every bond at workplace during the year given.  
  
To begin with, in relationships with supervisor, the largest starting proportion was 'very good' at 61% in 2005. It was followed by 'good' quantity at 26%, although there was a slight decrease of 4% in 2009. The figure of 'very good' rise to roughly 65%. Meanwhile, the percentage of no answer disappeared in 2009 and there was a fall in 'fail' figure by 2%. In contrast, the worker who did not have a supervisor increased from 1% to 5%.  
  
On the other hand, the connection between workers and co-workers had a great rise in the figure of 'very good' of 7% over four-year period to 70%. In contrast, there were a decline in the percentage of 'good' and the percentage of 'fair' by 3% and 4% successively. Meanwhile, the rest parts had only a tiny proportion above 3% in the year given. (199 words)  
  
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Hi Miss Septi. Here are my suggestions towards your essay.  
  
The breakdown of the information (...) and their co-workers are compared in pie charts.  
==> the verb should be singular because the subject is the singular one.  
  
the most obvious facts that is the correspondent gave the largest figure of ...  
==> the verb should be plural because the subject is the plural one. **(this is for your adjective clause)**  
==> you didn't write down you main verb for your main sentence.  
  
there were a decline in the percentage  
==> there was a decline in the percentage.  
  
However, the way you use the paraphrase is good. Just look no your subject-verb agreement.  
Goodluck and Keep Spirited.
**The charts below show the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationship with their supervisors and their co-workers.**  
  
The charts give information about the percentage of relationship people who have a job in a company with their supervisors and co-workers in 2005 and 2009. Overall, it can be seen that employees have very good relationship with their supervisors and co-workers in 2003 and 2009.  
  
Relationship workers with their supervisors in 2005 is very good with the percentage is 61. Then, it is followed by good category as much as 26 percent, fair relationship is 8%. While, in 2009 the percentage was increase 65. It can be say that, very good category relation, 22 percent employees have good relationship and 65 percent is fair.  
  
On the other hand, the percentage of relationship workers with their co-workers in 2005 and 2009 is 63 and 70, both of them is very good relation. While, others are have good relation above 24 percent. In 2005 workers have fair relation is 7 percent and 2009 is 3 percent. Just at least 1-2 percent which argue they do not have poor relation or co-workers.  
  
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Hai @Reski, I got some suggestions for your writing:  
  
The charts give (THE) information about the percentage of (PEOPLE'S) relationship ~~people~~ who have a job in a ...  
... employees have ~~very good~~ (CLOSE) relationship with their ...  
  
... their supervisors in 2005 ~~is~~ (WAS) very good ...  
Then, it ~~is~~ (WAS) followed by good ...  
While, in 2009 the percentage ~~was increase~~ (INCREASED TO) 65. It can be ~~say~~ (SAID) that, (IN/REGARDING) very good category ...  
  
... and 2009 is 63 and 70 (RESPECTIVELY), both of them ~~is~~ (WERE) very good relation. While, others ~~are~~~~have~~ (HAD) good relation ...  
In 2005 workers ~~have~~ (HAD) fair relation is 7 percent and 2009 ~~is~~ (WAS) 3 percent.  
  
\*pay attention on your grammar.