dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
The writer has written 223 words. Well over the minimum 150 word requirement, but not possible within the 20 minute time allotment. If the proper analysis, drafting, and final writing review is applied, the writer should not write more than 200 words. The essay is a good practice in English writing and vocabulary building but, that target created an essay that does not deliver in terms of cohesiveness and coherence which collectively, are the 2nd most important scoring considerations.  
  
A certain paragraph does not have a clear topic sentences kicking it off, preventing a clear topic focus in the paragraph. The task 1 essay is not an opinion essay but a reporting presentation. The wordiness of the essay is the cause of the essay's weak presentation. Direct reporting of information is score friendly as it keeps the report on track and informative in the correct way.  
  
The period began with Asia  
- What period ?This is missing a topic sentence. This is a less informative presentation due to incorrectly positioned data presentation.  
  
In 1960, Asia and the rest of the world's  
- This is a clearer and more data focused presentation.
## Many of the countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects

  
  
These days, detrimental consequences caused by foreign tourists is a hotly-debated topic that often divides opinion among various countries. To come to this point, there are many reason which can be talked about but it is worth noticing that the large concentration of people has led to the rapid spread of strange viruses, thereby creating a serious pandemic. In terms of giving solution, security establishment should be tightened and manage strictly. This essay will elaborate these ideas in details below.  
  
Definitely, the contaminate of some viruses has strongly affected the development of host countries. Despite the fact that the disease's symptoms have been announced, it is difficult to determine whether or not a person is afflicted. In a little more details, doctors must conduct at least two tests before concluding that a patient is ill. As a result, receiving a high number of international visitors with the potential for disease outbreaks will be challenging for governments. For instance, the corona virus has its origins in Wuhan, China and then quickly spread to the rest of the world due to a huge number of flights and voyages from and to there. After just two years the pandemic has been expanding and evolving into stronger forms of the virus.  
  
With respect to changing the perspective above, it is suggested that host nations implement rigorous security regulations and medical procedures in densely populated areas. Thereby, officials may more closely monitor the visitors to their nation and enhance the possibilities of controlling or identifying the sickness. As an evidence, according to WHO reports, the danger of infection has been lowered to only 25% by strengthening security and social distancing. In addition, the government should increase laws and punishments in order to promote public awareness about disease prevention. Thanks to these radical measures, governments can now allow international visitors to come and be more assured about dealing with a potential pandemic in the future.  
  
In conclusion, diseases brought by foreign tourists have raised concerns among countries due to the severe aftermaths. Nevertheless, improving medical and security measures is critical to dealing with and preventing this problem. It is strongly recommended that countries all over the world invest in this problem to guarantee both their people and tourists a secure and healthy future.
I am unsure as to whether you are on topic with this topic or not due to the missing prompt statement. There are several prompts in relation to international tourism. That is why it is important that the original topic and writing instructions be included with the response essay post. There is no available prompt that refers to a pandemic discussion. It is more than likely that the writer misrepresented the original discussion by creating a totally different topic. Which would limit the TA score due to an inaccurate restatement. If I am right, then there is a likelihood the discussion responses may be incorrect as well. Again, the lack of proper topic presentation and writing guidelines limit the assessment I can provide for this essay.
## **Many things can influence the academic achievement and emotional growth of a student.**

  
*In this regard, peers have more of an impact than teachers do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?*  
  
In recent years, whether academic success and emotional development are affected by teachers or classmates is a subject of discussion. Although a number of people are in favor of considering teachers to have a greater impact on students' performances, I firmly believe that peers are more influential than teachers.  
  
To begin with, it is clear that since motivated by competing with other classmates, a student can achieve academic success. To be more specific, pupils have a desire to outperform peers, as demonstrating broader knowledge and high score achievements. This affects the improvements of not only students' self-study skills but also their efforts in better performances. According to recent surveys, a number of undergraduates stated that they have more motivation to study in which challenging themselves to compete with other classmates plays a vital role rather than requirements from the teachers. These surveys offer strong evidence to prove that classmates place significant effects on students' academic achievement.  
  
On top of that, having relationships with other classmates helps expand students' social circle, which means placing impacts on their emotional development. Pupils spend most of their time with classmates at school in which they share new ideas, beliefs, and experiences with others. Developing good relationships with friends allows pupils to learn how to control and express their emotions as well as the right way of behavior. One study has shown that undergraduates perform better management of emotional expression by cooperating and interacting with peers. This illustrates that relationships with classmates are essential for juniors with regard to emotional development.  
  
Overall, classmates play an essential role in motivating undergraduates to enhance their knowledge and control their emotional expressions. For these reasons, it is obvious that peers have more effects on students' academic achievement and emotional growth.
This is a pretty good response essay. It meets all of the discussion requirements and is developed enough to be considered cohesive and competent in explanation. The reference to surveys and research / studies is general enough to pass at non- researched data since no numbers were mentioned. I have to point out though that these types of essays gain better scores when the writer uses personal experience sequences. That point of view is the most and highly scored example because it shows the writer's convincing analogy based on personal knowledge. Sometimes the writer must learn to identify which example will best suit the essay. The personal experience works best for most Task 2 discussions.
Thank you for giving me advice about this writing. Your comments will be really useful to me. Thanks a lot  
  
The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.  
  
Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.  
  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.  
  
You should write at least 150 words. The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.  
  
Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.  
  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.  
  
You should write at least 150 words.  
  
The given line graph illustrates the yearly spending on mobile phone and landline phone services in the USA over a decade from 2001. A cursory glance at the chart is enough to show that the spending of mobile users showed an upward trend as opposed to the steady decrease in residential services consumers.  
  
In the beginning year, that was in 2001, while the customer on fixed-line service reached the highest point at approximately 8700 dollars, the cellular services stayed at 200 dollars, the lowest figure in the whole period.  
  
Regarding the following years, there was a marginal rise in mobile phone consumers which skyrocketed in 2010 with a fourfold jump relative to its initial figure in the beginning year. Meanwhile, the expenditure on landline services dropped steeply to 400 dollars which means it declined by 300 dollars from 2001 to 2010. Furthermore, a significant figure can be incidentally observed in 2006 when two services both hit exactly 500 dollars.
***Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school***  
## Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

  
  
It is universally acknowledged that learning a second language is of paramount importance in our entire lives. Therefore, some professionals think that the adolescents studying at primary school should start learning a language different from their mother language is better than the ones studying at secondary school. In this essay, I advocate that the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks and, I am going to give some evidence to prove my perspective clearly.  
  
On the one hand, it is understandable that learning a different language plays a pivotal role in developing self-educated skills of young people. It is undeniable that children have a special affinity for animated cartoons on TV. In addition, the cartoons designed by directors from the US and UK where English is used as a national language. As a result, when English is taught for children at primary school, the adolescents can be into grasping what cartoon characters on foreign movies are talking about. After that, from my experience, I believe that children will improve their English skills gradually and frequently and become a master of English in the future.  
  
In contrast, it is obvious that nations not using alphabet letters have to face with barriers while their citizens want to have access English. A clear example of this is residents from China, Japan, Korea where ideogram letters are used in public. Hence, when children at primary school have opportunity to start learning both ideogram and alphabet letters, they have not seldom felt confused. In my opinion, it is not good for developing progress of children and their multilingual skills. Teaching a English for adolescents from China or Japan is a effective way when the children study at secondary school.  
  
In conclusion, learning a new language is a good idea for children at elementary education instead of secondary education. Learning a second language helps children brush up their self-educated skills to achieve career advancement in the future, however, it also drives Chinese or Japanese crazy when they must learn English.
The essay is highly verbose at 333 words. Such a word count cannot be completed within 40 minutes. The writer is focusing on over extending the essay, without considering the need for a quick response and explanation, fully and properly written within 40 minutes in proper English. This problem is evident in the first paragraph where a personal opinion, unrelated to the task was first introduced, but no proper topic references in relation to the opinion of the writer was provided. This delivered an incomplete . response as it relates to the discussion paragraphs.  
  
The discussion paragraphs do not correctly defend the writers opinion as it does not use the primary and secondary conditions provided in the original prompt properly. The writer is focusing on specific countries in relation to the discussion where a general country reference is required. There are irrelevant references made to cartoon shows and idiagrams. By the end of the essay, the writer had gotten so far off base with the discussion that it can only get a failing score in the end.
## writing task 2 problems-solutions

  
  
***People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems?  
Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?***  
  
t is claimed that people who live in cities have suffered many issues every day. I believe that moving them to less populated towns is the best method for solving some serious issues that have arisen.  
  
There are two primary problems that residents often face within their daily life. The first one is that citizens can easily get into mental health trouble such as stress, depression. Because they usually work hard all day in a competitive environment and also less contact with their family or friends. The second one is that the population in cities is increasing rapidly. As a result, this tendency leads to the demand for accommodations, employment, and construction.  
  
Therefore, measures must be taken by governments to change negative questions. It is believed that governments should advise citizens to come to smaller towns because of its benefits. Firstly, in towns, they do not have to live in a tough environment which impacts their health. Besides, the local people are very friendly, and they will have more real relations. Secondly, smaller will give them more opportunities because there are fewer populated than cities.  
  
In addition, I strongly believe that governments should move people to smaller areas to tackle problems.
The essay is more than likely to fail as it is only composed of 201 words rather than the required 250+ word count. That is the first problem with the essay. The thesis statement responds to only the second question. The first question response requirement was completely ignored. So the task accuracy requirement based on the paraphrase + question response is lacking. The TA score is facing 2 deductions immediately. Both of which will be difficult to overcome as the reasoning paragraphs are too short to be considered properly developed explanations.  
  
While there are 2 valid discussion points in each paragraph, the uniter does not go beyond a simple statement. There is a lack of convincing explanation based on clearly connected topics and explanations. The writer cannot expect a passing score in that section either. The total presentation is too weak to be considered for a passing score.
## Should everyone become vegetarian?

  
  
Many people are becoming vegetarians as they believe that a vegetarian diet is better for their health. Although I agree that a diet with full of plant foods brings many benefits to human body, I do not concur that everyone should stop eating meat in order to have good health.  
  
There are many reasons why a diet without meat or fish is beneficial. Firstly, people who have plant-based foods may decrease risks of several chronic illnesses such as diabetes, obesity and cancers. This is due to the fact that eating healthily plenty of vegetables and fruits provides our bodies with important vitamins and minerals as well as a little fat and sugar which are harmful. For example, soy, pumpkin, or chia seeds and walnuts are rich sources of Omega-3, vitamin E and magnesium. So that, instead of eating many kinds of animal foods to get these nutrients, we only need some walnuts or others. Overall, a reduced risk of disease means that the health advantages of vegetarianism can essentially lead to a longer life.  
  
However, there are some disadvantages that should be considered before obeying a plant-based diet. In the first place is that daily meat-free meals of consumers may provide a lack of calories for energy needs of human body, therefore vegetarians could be drained. Moreover, several people are following an incorrectly vegetarian diet which also brings horrible effects to their health. Because plant products are low in vitamin B12, vitamin B6, zinc and some other key minerals, consequently plant-eaters may have anemia or heart disease. Additionally, the limitation of food choices is possible to make eaters feel stressed.  
  
In conclusion, although a vegetarian diet is advantageous for human health, it requires knowledge of its pros and cons. For that reason, everybody should be careful when following a plant-based diet, or accept other healthy and balanced food options which are more suitable.
In the restatement, the writer did not provide the original reason for the provided opinion. It was altered from, "...they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet" to, "...a vegetarian diet is better for their health." Altering the original topic and changing the reason for the succeeding discussion. This portion will recieve a failing score based on an unrelated prompt response.  
  
The actual response is not in the prescribed format either, further adding to the score failure consideration. The original instruction was to write 2 paragraphs that prove the validity of an agreement or disagreement with the topic. While this was responded to in the first paragraph, it was not properly supported in the succeeding paragraphs as the writer changed the response format from agree or disagree to a comparison format based on advantage / disadvantage consideration instead.  
  
The essay cannot get a passing score based on these reasons.
## structure of the young population in the UK

  
  
The line graph depicts the proportion of citizens under 20 years old divided into 4 main age groups in the United Kingdom from 1990 to 2001.  
In general, the ratio of infants from 0 to 4 years old witnessed a dramatic downfall, whereas that of 5-9, 10-14, and 15-19 children age groups saw an opposite movement.  
  
In 1990, roughly just over a quarter of the total population of the UK was children from 4 to 10 years old and from 15 to 19 years old. After reaching its peak at 26,5% in 1992, the figure for infants started to fall steadily to just under 24% in 2001, which was matching with that of 15-19 years old adolescents in 1999. In terms of 15-19 children's percentage, which sharply dropped in the nearly first half of the given period and bottomed out at 23% in 1994, followed by a gradual increase to 25% in 2001.  
  
Furthermore, 5-9 and 10-14 years old children groups increased steadily from 25% for the former and 23% for the latter to 26% and precisely 25%, respectively and this matched with the number of infants in 1997. At which point, the ratio of 10-14 group saw a steep upward to just over 26% in 2001. By contrast, a slight fall to 25% was experienced by the 5-9 youngsters' group at the end of the period.  
  
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The essay should not be longer than 175 - 200 words. The writer is risking not being able to complete the report in 20 minutes. Time allotment should be as follows:  
  
5 minutes - image assessment  
10 minutes - report drafting  
5 minutes - editing, proofreading, and finalizing  
  
Not all 20 minutes should be devoted to writing alone.  
  
The essay is too wordy and needs to focus on direct data presentation instead. The more concise , the better. The writer shows limited grammar skill as he is unable the use other punctuation marks aside from the commas and periods. Use of semi-colons, parenthesis, and other appropriate punctuation marks would have made the essay more informative with lesser word usage.
## export earnings (2015-2016)

  
  
The bar chart and table compare the export value in five given categories between 2015 and 2016.  
  
It can be seen that export value an upward trend over period time. Moreover, petroleum products and engineered goods accout for largest proportion of export earnings i 2015 and 2016.  
  
The country's most money-making which is petroleums product. It was moderate increase, from 60 billion to approxiamately 63 billion, it was 3% rise. A similar growth with engineered goods-at 8.5%.  
  
On behalf of various industries, germs and jewellery took the lowest rank. The amount of money which were from those felt down dramatically, from 43 billion to 40 billion in a year, while the export earnings of textiles climb rapidly to over 30 billion- at 15.8%. In contrast, the agricultural product went up slightly, about 30 billion.  
  
The charts give the information about export value in various industries in a nation from 2015 to 2016.  
  
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Complete the summary overview by listing the 5 categories and measurement type. As these are shared listings between the images, do not forget to mention it as such. The proper inclusion of these information will help add to the informative nature of the summary overview.  
  
This is a 2 image essay so the presentation should not be more than 4 paragraphs. The writer cannot have a 5th paragraph representation of a single sentence. That should be integrated into one of the data analysis paragraphs instead.  
  
The reporting paragraphs need to start with an identification of the image title. That is because, even though the comparison basis topics are shored, the percentage information presented in each in measurement topic specific. The information presented lacks clarity and leaves the reader severely confused, leading to a possibly failing C + C score,which can result in an overall failing score when added to other deduction considerations.
## benefits of hosting important events

  
  
Some adopt a view that being event's hosts bring a great job in boosting the country up. While the objectors argue that it could not push any growing for the country. In my opinion, I would argue that hosts cant develop their economic. Below are some discussion about both schools of thoughts.  
  
On the one hand, it is noteworthy that sports events have a huge distribution for local tourism industry. For instance, when the national team attend to the competition, it is normally that their fans would came up with them to advocate and support the idols. Thus, the rate of accommodation, transport and catering will be increased to supply the requirements of visitors. It will be a mistake to overlook the facts that holding sport events exerts tremendous advantages in economic of the host countries.  
  
On the other hand, the antagonist may debate that it is may be a waste of Fed budget for welfare and inside facilities. If government organize contest, they are compulsory to improve quality of stadiums, infrastructure. It is a hug investment of authorities because they have to balance between domestic facilities and sport facilities. Obviously, it is a unanswered doubt for organizers because the losses caused would be higher than the gain obtained.  
  
To sum up, talking into consideration all of the above-mentioned facts, I believe that accepted holding the competition still exerts the many benefit. not only considering in economic side, it but also preserve and introduce the image of country into whole world. Hence, it will promote effectively the development in long run.