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This trend is ... controversies in society  
There is no reference to such a debate in the original presentation. Avoid adding unsupported claims that could change the original intention. Such additions may affect your TA score.  
  
As for me, I hold the view that ...explain why I disagree with it.  
To what extent? Based on your writing. it appears you totally disagree soyou should have used "totally" as the extent response to your disagreement. Without the extent reference, you deliver only a partially accurate response and will not recieve full scoring considerations.  
  
I am against this opinion  
Repeat the extent response to restate your opinion in line with the discussion needs indicated in the original presentation.  
  
they can be fed up with their careers in the future.  
I'm not sure what you mean by this. To be"fed up" means to be full of anger at a situation. I really doubt that is what you meant to imply. This confusing remark could create a GRA deduction for you and and an additional C + C reduction as well.
Hi everyone, I am going to take the IELTS test next two months. I am glad to receive your feedback about my essay, thank you!  
  
## percentage of PEOPLE WHO passed THEIR driving test

  
  
A driving license is one of the most important identifications that one individual should have. The chart gives some information visually about the percentage of driving tests passed between men and women from 1980 to 2010.  
  
Through 30 years, the ratio of women who passed their driving test has always been higher than this of men. It can be seen from the chart that almost half of women had driving licenses during the 1980s. Since then, this proportion has still increased and peaked at 68% in 2000. However, in the following ten years, it jumped down, to a lesser extent, 64%.  
  
In regard to other gender, there was about a quarter of men passing their driving tests in 1980. This percentage grew rapidly during the 1990s and got nearly double in 2000. It seems like there was no change in the following ten years since then.  
  
Overall, there are more women than men having driving licenses for 30 years. Nonetheless, this proportion of women tends to decrease while there are more and more men passing their driving tests.  
  
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[~~quote=phuongtrang56780]A driving license is ... individual should have.[/quote]~~  
Task 1 essays do not require any personal opinion nor additional information Statements such as these are not necessary as it is not part of the scoring consideration. The summary overview should only be based on the provided image data.  
  
The chart  
There are several types of charts used in the test. The identifying name or title of the chart must be provided for differentiation and lor identification as a part of the TA requirement.  
  
had driving licenses  
Had driving licenses, or passed the test? There is a marked difference in the meaning of the 2. You representation says women have licenses, without referring to the test,which is the basis of information. That is an incorrect reference that is TA and C+C deductible. When properly structured this sentence becomes a repeat of the first sentence, another C+ C problem.  
  
Overall, there are more ... their driving tests.  
While the tending sentence maybe placed anywhere in the presentation, this sentence provides the most use and scoring impact when combined with the summary overview. That is because it completes the information summary at the very start, making it easier to understand the point of the report.  
  
It seems  
Use accurate statements. This is a note of uncertaintity that indicates a failure off analysis on your part. Again, the TA score shall be affected.
## many young people are miserable today

  
  
It is widely believed that young people nowadays enjoy longer lives and better health. However, they lack happiness despite all the material possessions they have. I would argue that there is one cause to their not being happier, and proper measurements should be taken into account so as to solve this problem.  
  
The major cause of this problem is the growth of the Internet. Truly, the Internet has been playing an indispensable role in our daily life for a few decades. It brings about numerous advantages such as convenience, entertainment, news, to name but a few. Nevertheless, the downwards that it can bring may be quite devastating. For example, cyber-bullying occurs frequently on social platforms. Hence, it can hurt people both physically and mentally, which is why there are so many suicidal related to cyber-bullying. Moreover, hackers are threatening the security system, even the top knot  
  
Several measures should be taken in order to address people about this situation. The government could enact cyber laws to punish cyber-bullies. With the help of advanced technology nowadays, there is no difficulty in tracking bullies online. Moreover, schools should include cyber safety in their curriculums. Students should be taught and acknowledged about this issue as it is not uncommon, especially for their age groups. These two measures would definitely improve the alarming issue occurring daily online, which would surely bring about fulfillment and happiness to their life.  
  
In conclusion, by taking steps to curb online crimes, the government would help young people develop into delightful citizens in the future.
material possessions  
This is an incorrect assumption. The original reference point is health and long life, along with money. Therefore, the reference in this statement cannot be based on a material reference position alone.  
  
there is one cause to their not being happier,  
Which is ? State the reason for clarityof response.  
  
proper measurements should be taken into account so as to solve this problem.  
Which are? Again, the thesis statement does not require a repeatof the instructions but a summary of the topic responses/topic. These help increase youJ TA score.  
  
~~Moreover, hackers are threatening the security system, even the top knot~~  
Why did you add this topic as a reason without fully explaining it? The lack of developed reasoning for this topic made an otherwise properly explained reason come across as incomplete. This single sentence will result in C+C deductions when there should not have been any.  
  
The solutions are acceptable based on your causes paragraph. However, the concluding summary does not give a short version ofthe discussion based on 40 words or 2 - 5 sentences. The reverse paraphrase in this case does not exist and would further lowerthe final score.
This essay is too long for a task 2 presentation. You have 40 minutes to complete the task inclusive of editing, revision, proofreading, and final writing. These tasks, which will ensure a high score cannot be completed if you try to write over 500 words. When writing for this task, it is always better to write within a word bracket, since every paragraph should nothave more than 5 sentences in it anyway. The minimum word count is 250 words. Writing up to 300 words will bethe most ideal presentation for any task 2 topic.  
  
An extra long essay such as this always results in forced errors that lead to a failing score. In this case, you did not write a response based on the required discussion. You are discussing this based on an agree or disagree presentation when the instruction is different. You were supposed to respond and discuss 2 topics individually in relation to the question, "What are the reasons and solutions of this issue?"  
  
First, financial management ... for this phenominon.  
This definition is not needed in the essay. You just lengthened the presentation without reason. The examiner will not score this as a part of the valid presentation. Rather, it will be deducted from the word count and affect your score as an irrelevant discussion. In the end, there will be 2 major reasons why this essay will not recieve a passing score. There are also several other errors in relation to scoring sections that will further reduce the final score.  
  
I can sense that you are trying your best so I hope to see improvements with your next presentation.
## In Some Countries Owning A Home Rather Than Renting One Is Considered important

  
  
It is disputed that whether owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people in some countries. In my point of view, this is both a positive and negative situation due to many explanations.  
  
In this day, home ownership is likely most people's purpose owing to many typical reasons. Firstly, possession of a house has widely become a spiritual happiness of the majority of people in some countries. With a house they can be proud to show it to their friends and confidently assert their position in society. The second cause is that in many Asian's nations, owning a house is an auspicious outset for their career. The more beautiful their house is, the greater their zenith of career is.  
  
Notwithstanding, there exists some demerits when people choose to possess a house. The most typical problem is the financial burden, from which people have to obligate themselves to go through hardships to earn enough money. Besides, not only do the appearances of other expenses such as interior decorations increase the expenses, but it also makes people confront to mental obstacles and physical barriers because of money earning pressure. In some countries, the price of house has risen dramatically each year, hence, it becomes a difficulty for people, especially the young, to have a house.  
  
Conversely, many people prefer owning a house to renting one since they found it advantageous that meet their demand. First of all, it is an absolutely outstanding method to save money for the long run. A house would be simply paid for only one time during their lives with an affordable price. Moreover, a house has a long-term value, thus, people can be free to decorate their house with their favourite style. Beneficially, it means people do not have to change ceaselessly their accomodations like renting a house.  
  
In conclusion, there are both positive and negative effects when it is important for people to own a home rather than renting one.
this is both a positive and negative situation due to many explanations.  
This response would have been acceptable if the discussion instruction asked you to compare the positive and negative aspects. The problem is that the word "Or" was used in the question, which indicates a single opinion response choice and succeeding response. You can only defend and support one side of the discussion based on the choices provided. This automatically gets a low TA score due to a lack of clear opinion.  
  
The response you provided created a comparative discussion which means you responseis in the incorrect format aswell. So that makes for 2 TA errors at once. The TA score will more than likely be the cause of the failing overall score. You altered your discussion presentatio to suit the discussion format you created rather than the one instructed. Such prompt deviations never have a positive scoring result.
I will commend the grammar, and I see you make any mistake in the article.  
  
"... become ~~a~~ spiritual happiness"  
"With a house, they ..."  
"... in many Asian~~'s~~ nations"  
"there exist~~s~~ some ..."  
"the price of a house has ..."  
"it becomes ~~a~~ difficult~~y~~ for people,..."  
"... to change their accommodations ceaselessly"
@Kyet  
  
It is disputed that  
=>> It is still a bitter controversy  
  
they can be proud to show it to their friends  
=>> they can show it off to their friends  
  
it becomes a difficulty  
=>> it is becoming more and more challenging  
  
thus, people can be free to ... Beneficially, it means people do not have ...  
I think there is something reverse in the sequence of meaning here. In my opinion, it should be:  
=>> Owning a house means that people can benefit from not changing ceaselessly their accommodations like renting a house, thus, they are free to decorate their house with their favorite styles  
  
There are some feedbacks that I think it is helpful for you. I hope you can complete your writing day by day
Hello everyone I'm going to take my Ielts test this August and currently cramming for the test TT  
My desired band score in Writing is 6.5+ and I would be very grateful if anyone could help me score this essay and give valuable advices.  
  
Thanks in advance  
  
***All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them.***  
## Do you agree or disagree?

  
  
It is said that there should be a ban on fossil fuel-based cars and people should be introduced to those running on electricity. I personally disagree with this statement because electric cars are expensive and often cause inconvenience to users for charging time.  
  
Although cars powered by electricity are more environmentally friendly since they only need electricity to provide power and release no exhaust fumes, these vehicles are often sold with costly prices. Many people who have low incomes found electric cars to be unaffordable since these automobiles usually cost considerably higher price to purchase. This fact results in individuals struggling to purchase and maintain their own car to travel daily. For instance, in order to buy an electrically powered car, it cost around $19000 higher, on average, than its equivalent conventional car.  
  
Another reason that can be justified is that time spent on charging could make commuting more inconvenient. If commuters are in a hurry and their cars run out of battery accidentally, a significant amount of precious time will be wasted on charging the vehicles. Such cars would be considered as a nuisance and, consequently, likely be refused by a number of people to drive them daily. For example, my friend was once reprimanded by his teacher for being late for an extra class due to his automobile's required charging time when traveling from his school.  
  
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people should not be banned from driving gasoline-powered cars and accept electric ones as alternatives regarding the financial burden as well as troubles from battery charging time that electric-powered cars create. Each individual should be free to make their choice about which type of vehicles to purchase and run depending on their salary and preferences.
ban on fossil fuel-based cars  
This reference is a direct cut and paste from the original prompt. As you cannot use cut and paste or memorized words in this presentation, expect scoring deductions because of it.  
  
I personally disagree with this statement because ... for charging time.  
Excellent work. You clearly provided an opinion and 2 summarized supporting reasons. These will help your score immensely.  
  
I strongly believe  
No need to use an emotional presentation. This is not an emotional response or extent essay. A simple restatement will suffice.  
  
as well as troubles from battery charging time that electric-powered cars create  
This is a seperate idea and should be written as a separate sentence. Combining it in this sentence removed the clarity of the thought presentation.  
  
While there are a few accidental errors in your presentation, I attribute that to your self-study method. Overall though, you made an excellent effort and, with proper guidance, can pass the test.
Hello everyone, I am a newbie on this website. I am studying English myself and plan to take the IELTS test next two months. My target for Writing is about 6.5. Here is one of my practices and I am glad to receive all of your feedback.  
  
***Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible.  
  
## Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

  
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.***  
  
During Covid-19, the online-based technologies for working or learning from home are becoming familiar globally. As far as I am concerned, these helpful developments have changed our human life positively.  
  
Firstly, the more people get access to these tools, the more affordable their price for one user is. When the apps and websites used for telecommuting gain popularity, there will be much more players providing this kind of service. Under the pressure of competition, service suppliers will cut down their costs and prices.  
  
Secondly, working and studying online means that student doesn't have to go to school and adults don't need to be at the office all day. In a long run, that could be a low-cost and reasonable solution for all organizations in view of the fact that they needn't have as many facilities as they used to. Thus, they could save a relatively huge amount of money on utility bills. About children, their parents are able to pay lower tuition fees because other expenses for schools have gone.  
  
Last but not least, although teleconferencing and distance education are not as effective as direct interaction, there are still some obligatory circumstances that we have to use them. To illustrate, in the case of pandemics like Covid-19, it is practically impossible to hold classes and meetings offline. That is the reason why Zoom which is a cloud-based app providing videotelephony and online chat services achieved its success and rose up as a billion-dollar business.  
  
In conclusion, we are not able to do the whole task online using cloud-based services. Nevertheless, teleworking and distance education are now well-received all over the world. Anyway, it cannot be denied that these technologies are useful and necessary for our life.
these helpful developments have changed our human life positively.  
Kindly provide at least 2 reasons why you believe this to be true. This is to help create a summary of the upcoming discussion based on a clear opinion and supporting evidence or topics.  
  
Last but not least,  
This is a 2 paragraph discussion essay. Adding another reason will not help your score. Rather, it could add to your response wors that could reduce your potential to recieve a passing score.  
  
we are not able to do the whole task online using cloud-based services.  
You are to present a summary of the preceding topic and reasons. You must avoid adding information that you cannot further explain in this section. A reverse summary will be acceptable.  
  
There is a sense of clarity in your presentation that proves your ability to understand and create an English based discussion. Keep writing. I am sure you can hone your potential further.
Hi everyone, I'm a college student studying for an IELTS test later this year. I still make a lot of mistake so please comment so I can improve from your advice. Thank you all and have a great day! Please read my writing below:  
  
**TOPIC:**  
***These days, some schools do not have enough money to pay for all the programs that they think are necessary for their students. As a result, some schools are considering allowing advertisements in their buildings.***  
  
## Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?

  
  
**My answer:**  
  
Many schools are facing drastic financial problem to support imperative courses for their students. Consequently, they are taking into account the option of placing commercial ads on campus. I think, despite many drawbacks, this is a good way to solve the school's tight budget problem .  
  
Granting companies permission to put advertisement on school 's grounds is a win-win strategy. For the local businesses, it is a great way to approach new customers as kid are tremendously influential to their parents' purchase. On the other hand, opening school up to advertising messages is highly profitable and bring in extra money for the school without having to raise fees from parents. Besides, school leaders have control over which ads is acceptable to be displayed on school property. Many advertisement such as bill board about higher education or extra curriculum activities should not be considered distractions since they teach pupils making informative choices in terms of their learning.  
  
Having said that, allowing ads at school still poses many risks. Kids have already exposed to ads from the moment they wake up to the minute they go to sleep and adding more media to their day seems not a good idea. Therefore, school is expected to be a place to learn not a place for commercialism. Many worry that advertising posters and images can strongly grabs students' attendtion and throw off their focus on studying. In addition, children are very vulnerable to advertisement and persuasive ads could lead to impulsive buying goods that are not of necessity.  
  
In conclusion, letting companies advertise on campus may cause some distractions to students but they help ease the financial burden to schools. Advertising is here to stay so I strongly advocate schools open up for it as long as they carefully choose only family- appropriate content.
I think,  
You need to show a belief in your opinion. This reference point is uncertain. It means you are unclear when it comes to the response you support. This will definitely lower the TA score in terms of task response.  
  
kid are  
Grammar error. "Kid" is singular, "are" is plural. The correct reference is " kids are..." or , " a kid is". "Is" refers to third person singular while "are" refers to present indicative plural.  
  
On the other hand  
This is signifies a non- connected idea and should be a separate paragraph. The presentation mistake left the previous reason under-developed and lacking in a supporting discussion. This will cause C + C deductions. You misused the phrase as a transition phrase. The transition word "additionally" would have better connected, while transitioning the discussion topic.  
  
poses many risks.  
This is a single opinion defense. The discussion does not call for a comparative discussion. This section will be disregarded as it doesn't support the thesis statement. The reduced word count could result in a failed final score as there are already other busting ewiors in the presentation.
***Topic: A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stay with him/her on your next holiday. You are too busy to accept this invitation.***  
  
## Write a letter to your friend. In your letter,

  
  
*-Thank him for the invitation.  
-Explain why you cannot come.  
-Ask him about other time to visit.*  
  
Dear Heidon,  
  
I am writing to thank you for your invitation. It's very kind of you but unfortunately I won't be able to make it due to my hectic work schedule.  
  
Let me explain my situation in more detail. I've recently started a new position as a medical information specialist responsible for COVID-19 vaccine project. Currently I'm under an intensive training program for new employees which consists of online modules, live-coaching sessions along with relevant quizzes. I need to pass all required courses and assessments before going live. Hence, I have necessarily paid all attention to pass the probation by the end of the training program.  
  
Could you let me know of another time you will be free? I'd love to come and stay. I am very interested in seeing your tropical orchid garden you have grown, meeting your wife, Annie and playing with your son, Tommy. I'll be free in New Year and Christmas holidays or I can take a vacation in winter. I'd certainly like to escape the cold winter to visit you then!  
  
Please let me know,  
  
Your friend,  
  
Timothy