dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
The essay is not going to reach a base passing score. The writer has only provided 129 words for the essay. As suchs appropriate word requirement deductions will be applied. A task 1 essay must contain a minimum of 150 words to avoid preliminary score penalties. Failure to avoid the - requirement prevents the essay from , all sectional scoring considerations. The additional limited score will be in the report analysis section.  
  
The writer should know that the task must be completed over 3 paragraphs. This essay has only 1 and a half paragraphs provided. The analysis lacks balance and proper development. Therefore, the essay fails to deliver based on all 4 major scoring considerations.
In several nations, a soaring quantity of people have a tendency to learn about the background of their accommodation. This essay will show two reasons for this phenomenon and suggest the way helping hosts have further understanding about their house.  
  
Initially, some individuals care about the history of their building in a bid to unravel its true value. Some of these houses could be possessed by a well-known actor or a person who has numerous historical credits. By the way of illustration, a woman in New York has found that her apartment once belonged to Emma Watson, a talented actress and this precious information boosts its price up to 2 million dollars. Meanwhile, other householders have an intention to discover bizarre issues of their property, such as being haunted by ghosts. By having awareness of such things, possessors can apply spiritual solutions to feel safer. For example, a Brazilian couple believed there were an evil spirit in their mansion via rumors from neighbors. Therefore, a priest was invited to make ceremonies to purify the house.  
  
In terms of methods used to research the origin of a house, the Internet is widely recommended. With a vast deal of information, Google and other websites are considered as great sources for anyone curious about their accommodation. In fact, via the Internet, people may have a profound insight into their house. For instance, in 2013, a man in Paris found that his flat had been demolished three times by fire from 1980 -1995 while reading an online article on Wikipedia.  
  
In conclusion, the wishes to recognize the value of a house and learn about abnormal events are two typical reasons why people want to research the history of their accommodation, which can effortlessly be solved by using the Internet.
## detailed look at the table

  
  
In general, total numbers of workers and manufactories are inverse, while the first one shows significant drops, the other seems to has an unstable trend.  
  
Looking at the table in more detail, there were 477,100 employees with male taking the bigger proportion . And for most of the time, men outnumbered women except in 1861, when there were almost 30,000 less to compare between man and female employees. At the end of the period, worker numbers decreased about 8 times lower than one in 50 years ago. In term of gender distribution, statistics of male and female are nearly the same in 1901, the gap between was narrowed remarkably  
  
Trend in the number of manufactory is different. From 1851 to 1861 and 1871 to 1881, this figure showed to undergo minimal rises, hit its peak in 1881 with 721 factories. However, this phenomenon started to disappear and showed a downward trend instead in 1891. And finally in 1901, there were only 600 manufactories left, but still about 4 times higher compared to 1851.  
  
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A summary overview is only complete when the miter provides short details about the image type, what it represents, the measurement type and trend. The writer accomplishes only a part of that paragraph requirement, recieving only a partial score for that base score requirement.  
  
A complete summary is required for introduction clarity. This summary presentation only refers to a trending pattern. The last requirement of the summary presentation. A reference to the subject and reason for the measurement is important in this section.  
  
The writer needs to be more careful when proofreading his work. There are missing punctuation marks that infer a rushed presentation. While the winter has the potential to pass the test, lack of proper information and editing errors lowered the possible score.
## Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment

  
  
It is argued that only governments and large companies are able to improve the environment significantly. I somewhat agree with this viewpoint because of nowaday ecosystem's declining status. However, not just big organizations but individuals together can slowly and steadily upgrade the Earth.  
  
On the one hand, governments and companies should be in charge of the environment for a combination of reasons. First and foremost, activities from these operations are always on top of pollutants as they chase for profits irresponsibly. One such example of this is the 2016 event where several fish suddenly died in Ha Tinh, after investigation, Formosa company was accused of releasing contaminated wastewater. Another compelling reason is that our Earth is currently facing global disasters : tornadoes, tsunamis, cyclones,... This required leaders, especially authorities to be more conscious and to legislate environmental rules forcing their employees or citizens to follow. Therefore, companies and governments will surely create a more remarkable change than individual does.  
  
On the other hand I believe that individuals also play an indispensable part in protecting environmental progress. The primary is that every operation is built up from many single people. Each effort all has impact, merging into a huge, significant final result. And yet we all live in the same society, we have equal duty in protecting our surroundings. Furthermore, it is not about consequences but attitude, this statement might encourage false belief and lead to community's irresponsibility. And as a result, people, especially youngsters might disclaim their duty in facing global matters.  
  
In conclusion I believe that although only governments and companies can create a huge impact on the environment. However, it is essential for everyone to be aware of global matters and together save the Earth.
If the writer wishes to discuss this single opinion extent essay in a comparative format, a paragraphical compare and contrast format should be followed. That means, the writer must use the following format:  
  
Sentence 1 (Topic) : People believe that only governments can save the environment.  
Sentence 2 (validity): Governments oversee corporations that destroy the environment  
Sentence 3 (Counter argument): Government sometimes cover up the damage corporations cause  
Sentence 4 (validity): Relevant example showing how people fixed the environment.  
Sentence 5 (transition): This is why it is also up to the people to improve...  
  
By using the disproving writing method, an effective comparison extent response can be fully developed.
## having children late in life

  
  
It is true that in the modern world, many couples decide to defer procreation. This is largely down to young couples' ambition in their careers and their desire for financial stability, which negatively impacts society and family life.  
  
There are two reasons why a growing number of young people decide to delay their parenthood. Firstly, young people tend to put their career above family. Those who are ambitious devote their time and effort to work and make voluntary contributions to their companies. Meanwhile, childrearing that ties them down and restricts their freedom prevents them from pursuing their careers, so they delay giving birth. Secondly, newly-married couples want to have a stable income before giving birth. The cost of raising a child, such as healthcare services or food, is exorbitant, which transcends their meager income. Therefore, many couples are not ready to produce children when they are young and do not have enough savings to afford a better upbringing environment for their children.  
  
Nothing good will result from late pregnancy. From the perspective of the family, deferring childbirth widens the generation gap. The generation gap prevents meaningful communication between members of the family. An aged father could find it difficult to talk with his teenage daughter, or older mothers are likely to be overly strict with their sons. Another justification is that age would make giving birth harder for women. It is harder for an aged mother to recuperate from the labor, or even worse, they might encounter greater risks of miscarriage. Children also might be prone to the Down syndrome, which retards their growth.  
  
In conclusion, young couples delay pregnancy because of pursuing their careers and becoming financially stable. This trend causes severe consequences for both society and family life.
When interpreting the original topic, it is best that the writer does not affirm anything that was not done in the same manner in the original. seen as a personal opinion, such truth validations are not scared nor considered by the examiner as these change the target topic of the original discussion. The writer will score better when he does not add any statement that can alter the first presentation targets.  
  
The writer has a good presentation and sound reasoning. The ideas presented are supported with believable explanations for the most part. What the with lacks in the presentation is an ability to keep the cohesiveness of the discussion through the use of appropriate transition sentences. While transition words are ok to use for some essays, these words fail to preserve the relationship between ideas in a paragraph. A transition sentence is what ultimately delivers the better C + C score.
## Essay about advantages of computers

  
  
Hitherto, people often believe that the computer is the most significant creation of the last hundred years. This seems to be a sound argument to me and I firmly agree with this opinion, justifications are as follows.  
  
There is a wide array of reasons that account for the magnitude of computers, but the most prime one is that these technological features are excellent in functioning and analyzing data, which improve the performance of scientific research as well as statistics. In the past, these tasks were totally accomplished by humans. As a result, this work produced a huge amount of work for accountants and statics staff. As the quantity of information and figures rose gradually following the development of technology and industry, people could hardly get through this job rapidly and precisely. But nowadays, with the help of computers' versatility, all the things that we have to do is just inserting numbers and other stuff and let the computer work its own business.  
  
The second reason is that computers are extraordinary storage for videos, images, and many other kinds of documents, there is no restriction of data that we can put in. To clarify it in a better way, back in the 90s, if a person had a decision to listen to music while reading, he would have to bring both a book and an MP3. This seems to become unconventional in the last 10 years, in which people usually bring just a laptop that includes everything they need.  
  
In conclusion, there are many important inventions which extremely help us in many aspects of our lives. However, with those aforementioned benefits, computers can be supposed to be the best inventions over centuries.
Is the writer presenting a case in court? Perhapsdebating someone? Task 2 essays rely on everyday English words for its explanation.There is an emphasis on "everyday English words". Task 2 essays are witten simple discussions. Exaggerated and inapplicable word usage does not help the word usage or grammar accuracy score. Rather, it lessens the scoring ability of the paragraph due to the misuse of words. The over- exaggerated, yet missing a thesis statement opening presentation is inefficient in terms of creating a base score for the essay.  
  
The writer is knowledgable on the topic but tends to keep talking for the sake of word count. He sacrifices the quality of the discussion in the process. The writer has the wong scoring priorities. His paragraphs all not complex sentences but run-on presentations. He needs to simplify his presentations in a manner that best suits the scoring requirements. The conclusion in particular, falls short of the reverse paraphrase requirement.
***NEW TECHNOLOGIES AND WAYS OF BUYING AND SELLING ARE TRANSFORMING THE LIVES OF CONSUMERS.***  
## TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS OPINION?

  
  
In this day and age, customers' consumption has been affected distinctively by technological advance and innovative trading methods. In my opinion, I partially agree with the statement as several positive and negative changes can be arisen from this common tendency.  
  
On the one hand, introduction of technology and means of buying and selling would make our lives more utility and straightforward, especially in social distancing by COVID-19 pandemic. More and more online trading networks, such as Shopee and Tiki, have appeared, which is frequently used by consumers of different ages. People would order easily on online and pay their parcels by credit. Their parcels will be delivered to their home so fast. Since we do not need to go out to buy nourishment and necessary goods or contact face-to-face with strangers, we could avoid suffering from Corona virus.  
  
On the other hand, this phenomenon also has drawbacks. This is illustrated that speed of technological development has grown significantly, which makes the old people not adapt immediately. Besides, citizens who do not have smart phones or other electronic devices connected with the Internet would be impossible to trade goods on online. Places are not equipped with modern technological infrastructure, such as rural areas and mountainous regions, which disrupt online purchase. As a consequence, they would prefer to use traditional methods, include stores, market, and so on, to buy products rather than depend on new technologies or electronic devices.  
  
In conclusion, new technologies and trading methods help people buy and sell goods easily, particular in COVID-19 pandemic. However, we could not deny disadvantages of this trend, which is inconvenient for the old people or the one not being good at technologies.
The writer wrote allspouse paper that is unrelated to the topic. While the writer provided a measured response as an opinion statement in the first paragraph, the topic focus of the response was incorrect. Thus, the essay will recieve a failing score based on an unrelated response. There was a clear change in topic focus as the following comparison reveals:  
  
Original Topic: NEW TECHNOLOGIES AND WAYS OF BUYING AND SELLING ARE TRANSFORMING THE LIVES OF CONSUMERS.  
Your Topic: ... several positive and negative changes can be arisen from this common tendency.  
  
The student has a different topic in mind for the discussion ( positive and negative) from the actual presentation ( transforming the lives of consumers). The correct discussion focus would have been:  
  
*I completely agree that modern gadgets have changed the way people come to own and trade things.*
## positive feedbacks of McGrill university in 3 years

  
  
The table illustrates the proportion of students giving positive feedbacks for different criteria of McGrill university in 3 years: 2005, 2010,2015.  
Overall, most features of the university had become more satisfactory for students, especially the greatest increase occured to student services. Whereas, some remaining figures declined or stayed the same.  
  
It is clear from the table that there was an increasing zeal in student services' share, reaching a high record of 95 percent in 2015. Conversely, the statistics for the range of modules offered had experienced a decline amounting to only a quarter by the end of this survey shown.  
  
By 2005, students thought that library resources were the best accounting for 86 percent. Visibly, teaching quality and the former witnessed a similar pattern over the survey, with the contributions were still one of the highest, despite fluctuation, stood at about 78 percent and 87 percent respectively in 2015.  
  
In addition, the figure for sports and social facilities remained the same, 13 out of 20 students felt satisfied , in both 3 years.  
  
( sorry but i don't know how to copy the image of the table in here although i have tried. Please search for the table and give me feedbacks for my essay. Thank you so much)
There are several types of tables. The writer did not offer a complete image identification. The description from the instruction was used in a cutand paste format. The writer mustbecame familiar with all task 1 specific image types. Regardless, there is a proper summary overview and trending statement provided. However, the lack of image for comparison makes me worry about the outline accuracy. Please note that it is the student's responsibility to provide the image for this purpose.  
  
There are moments when the student reveals a measured point of comparison but neglects to provide the accompanying data numbers. This creates confusion in the paragraph that leads to a less than informative paragraph. This is a non-cohesive and less coherent scoring presentation.
## statistics of people who lived in Australia

  
  
Given is the line chart illustrating the proportion of people who lived in Australia came from different parts of the world.  
Overall, the figures for the total population in Australia and people born in Asia and Other increased between 1976 and 2011, while that of the UK experienced a decline.  
  
A more detailed look at the provided graph reveals that the total demographics of people in Australia declined slightly from 23 to 20 percent, hitting the lowest point in 2001, but then rose significantly to 25 percent during 10 years later. The trend then followed the same pattern as the figures for Other. The number of Australian people born in Other area was approximately 11 percent in 1976 which was a slight fall, followed by a soar and reached a peak at 14 percent in 2006.  
  
Starting at nearly 14 percent in 1976, the percentage of Australian people were born in the UK fell substantially to 5 percent in 2011, while the demographic figures of Australians of Asian descent saw a significant increase (from 3 percent in 1976 to its high of 15 percent in 2011) and the 1996s makes the point at which its figure overtook that for the UK, at 7.5 percent.  
  
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This is a pretty good presentation that falls within the requirements of a passing task 1 analysis report. The presentation pretty much covers the easily spotted percentages. The analysis focuses on both the highs and lows.The writer would have done well to analyze the criss crossing points in the presentation at least once for a totally comprehensive presentation. While the highs and lows are evident, the overlaps allow for a comparative presentation of equal points. Something that examiners tend to score melee on due to the more comprehensive report format. Avariation of the word percentage would have also been useful. Aside from the word itself and percentage sign, the terms proportion, rate and Matio would have been LR helpful.
## how to be successful in college?

  
  
Many young people often asked themselves that how to achieve their aims and to be successful in college. This essay will describe about two significant factors which resulted in a best performing in university's lives; one planning and time management, the other study habits.  
  
To begin with, students need to perform well your task schedule before starting lectures as it is a contribution to wonderful accomplishments in college. It means that planning time and setting their personal activities clearly are good ways to help them getting successful in college. For example, since young people should make an outline of to do list for the next week, they not only may avoid feeling overwhelming from an enormous of information in class but also do not make confusion of assignments. Moreover, time management has separated efficiently studying time and time for extracurricular activities for students. Due to diligent and discipline personality of students, they may be successful in college.  
  
Additionally, choosing accurately a study attitude also play an important role which leads to completely conquer good results to come. To put it another say that, every student is always a self-motivation person towards with their career path. For instance, they have to respect professors, be a diligent person, also they must understand clearly the top of priority which are focusing on learning and practising many assignments in class. Besides, when they are proactive in studying, it helps them to acquire high academic process easier as well as achievement more and more academic scholarships for moving up in their career ladders. That is the reason why these habits has played a very necessary role which should be in each student.  
  
To sum up, it is obvious that extremely difficult to be successful in college if students lack of skills such as performing well their task schedule, and learning with their self-motivation. As a result, these are two main elements which are the best key to unlock students's future, also allowing them to reach at high places in university's lives.
The first sentence of the restatement does not sound like a trophic restatement that was based on a previous statement. Original reason references appear to be missing. Good work on providing the thesis statement though. It shows good comprehension and reasoning skills on the writer's part. The real problem lies in the way the sentencen are presented in the discussion paragraphs.  
  
The writer manages to get his opinion across to the reader somehow. The writer lacks control over his sentence formation and word usage. The presentations are grammatically inaccurate on several counts relating to proper sentence presentation. The writer will do well to not try to write complexsentences yet. Practice simple sentence presentations first and perfect it.
**Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.  
  
## Discuss both views and give your opinion.**  
  
It is widely believed that parents should teach their children to be good members of society, but there are also a lot of arguments that school is the best place to educate them. Personally, I support the idea that children should learn how to be good society members from their parents.  
  
On the one hand, many people say that home is the first place to develop characteristics of a child. First of all, children always mimic their parents' activities and behaviors. Thus, it is very important that parents should set a good example for their kids. For instance, parents who always argue with others may find that their children tend to use this way to solve disagreements. Second, parents are the closest people to their kids, so they have many chances to teach children basic qualities of being a good society member such as obedience, respect and honesty  
  
On the other hand, there are arguments that support the idea that children should learn everything in school. There are several reasons for this point of view. One of them is that children may not have sufficient time with their parents as they may both be employed or they don't have the ability to teach their kids. Moreover, most schools have included these qualities as a part of the curriculum to help students develop fully. Another reason is schools also allow students to contact people from all classes ranging from high peers to dustmen and workers, and they will learn to behave with many types of people in an appropriate way.  
  
In conclusion, while school teach children both knowledge and develop their behavior, in my mind, parents' role are much more significant