dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
## nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything online

  
  
The advancement of technology has changed our lifestyle significantly, even to the way we up to speed the daily news or the way we absorb new knowledge. Some people believe that purchasing printed magazines or books soon be dispensable since we can read all the information from online sources for free. I completely disagree with this statement and I will illustrate some reasons in this essay.  
  
On the one hand, some documents related to politic or the government or laws must all be written or printed on papers. As they are the important evidence of an event or a lawsuit, which may be easily edited or deleted by hackers if they are share on online websites. Incorrect information will lead to several misunderstandings and some severe arguments, which later deteriorate the situations.  
  
On the other hand, lack of mobile phones or contemporary gizmos is also a vital reason. People from poor countries or who have financial difficulty cannot afford for any Internet-connected devices. For instance, many people who are homeless or living in slum rarely have enough money to pay for their daily living expenses so they do not really consider about buying a phone. Therefore, online news cannot replace printed newspaper books because not everybody is able to read things online.  
  
In conclusion, I believe that although reading things online maybe more convenient than traditional manner, printed books and newspapers will never be replaced by them. Since printed documents play a crucial role in our society and worth more values, they are always essential as a source of information in today live and in the future.
The first sentence is a personal opinion of the writer that is not related in terms of restatement requirements to the original topic. This should not be present in the prompt restatement + opinion paragraph. This particular section, based on the original presentation is only a 2 sentence restatement. One topic restatement and the extent opinion of the writer should comprise this paragraph's requirements. So only the last 2 sentences will receive a score while a deduction will be applied for the inclusion of the first sentence.  
  
As for the reasoning paragraphs, only one of the 2 presentations will recieve a score. That is because the response format chosen by the exam taker is incorrect. He opted to use a comparison format when the essay is a single opinion essay only. As a single opinion essay, the 2 paragraphs must offer strong supporting evidence for the writer's extent response. No deviations or change of opinion midstream. The examiner will only score the supporting reasoning paragraph. Deductions will again be applied for incorrect response formatting. The essay will also be considered lacking in development due to the missing 2nd supporting discussion. The essay is well on its way to a failing score at this point.
***In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people***  
## Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

  
  
There is a common trend that people in some countries prefer purchasing to renting a house. This essay will highlight both the positives and negatives that result from this approach.  
  
On the one hand, there are two possible advantages that owning a home would bring about. The first is the sense of comfort when being a house owner. It plays an important role in urban life. This is because people renting a home would concern about many problems related to monthly utility fees, house modification, and their landlord. They might have difficulty coping with financial burdens and having a good relationship with their house's owner. Another significant positive which should be highlighted is that people do not know what life holds in store for them in the future, hence owning a home in a long term appears safer than renting accommodation on a temporary basis. In fact, it has been proven that they can have settlement to concentrate on work or family.  
  
Nevertheless, there are some obvious disadvantages that would arise. The most obvious is the costs for home maintenance and repairs can impact savings quickly. This is because people tend to set a budget for unexpected home repairs which helps to ensure that they have enough money to keep their home safe and in good working order. Besides the home maintenance and repairs, homeowners may face many risks like certain disaster areas where tornadoes, hurricanes, and floods are common. In deed, it is definitely unpredictable, but purchasing or building a house a few hundred feet from ocean might easily lead to catastrophic consequences with no one to blame except their temptation to own waterfront property within incredible ocean view.  
  
In conclusion, there are plus point to be a homeowner regarding to the sense of comfort and safety. However, the downside would emerge consequently in terms of the cost of home maintenance and place
There is a common trend  
This is a prompt misinterpretation. There is no reference to a developing trend in the original topic basis. It only indicates that it is a common practice. This shows that the writer has a problem with English comprehension skills. The "trend" may be a writer's personal opinion and therefore, should not be included in the prompt paraphrase section.  
  
This essay will highlight both the positives and negatives that result from this approach.  
The writer has just failed the essay. His task response has not met the question response requirement. It also does not meet the discussion format considerations. The question is asking the writer to write single opinion response to the question. He cannot use a comparative discussion format because the question is asking him to explain why his chosen opinion is the correct opinion for this question.  
  
The writer will get a failing TA score at this point, making it difficult to achieve a base passing score since there are tremendous task deductions that will be applied to the preliminary score. There is no clear writer's opinion presented based on the discussion requirement, which is the primary reason for the failing score of this presentation.
## funds for transportation development

  
  
In our modern world, transportation has received attention from the public. Many people claim that the authorities should invest in high-speed transportation; however, others believe that the government should focus on other aspects, such as cost or the environment. While I agree with the former idea, I do believe that further investment in other priorities should be made first.  
  
On the one hand, there are several reasons why providing citizens with faster forms of public transportation has brought about benefits. Firstly, it enables people to commute to work quickly and effortlessly, which leads to an increase in work productivity. For example, employees can go to work on time, or students can have more leisure time to revise lessons before class. Furthermore, by adopting this method, people are less likely to be packed with cramped and hot buses. We do not have to leave home very early to get a seat on a bus. As a result, we will have more time to prepare or enjoy breakfast with our family.  
  
On the other hand, I believe that other aspects should be paid attention to. From my perspective, the major priority is the decrease in the price of public transport, which facilitates commuters who have low income. Additionally, the more significant issue is environmental degradation. If we only pay attention to outlay on transport and do not focus on the environment, numerous concerns will happen. For example, exhaust fumes emitted from vehicles exert a detrimental effect on the atmosphere, which makes people susceptible to diseases such as coughs or respiratory-related diseases. As a result, environmentally-friendly vehicles should be invested by related agencies and bodies.  
  
In conclusion, although faster means of public transport should be developed by the authorities, I do believe that spending money on other urgent issues such as the environment or cost is more crucial.
such as cost or the environment  
You have added personal information to the topic rephrasement. This has changed the topic focus for the essay and affected the accuracy of your topic restatement. The topic restatement is a failure. Your personal opinion response is also incorrect since you are using an extent essay response in a single opinion essay that requires you to discuss both views and offer a solid single, rather than comparative opinion. Opinion statement failure.  
  
This essay requires that the writer know how to explain the reasons for certain public opinions based on a public perspective, while offering a personal opinion for each public option. That is the response format that most adheres to the prompt requirements for the discussion. The writer has opted to use a personal opinion throughout the essay instead, thus not following the expected response format. The writer has shown an unfamiliarity with the prompt formatting requirements at this point. He has not provided an essay that would get a passing score. He must familiarize himself with various response prompts and response formats prior to moving forward with his practice tests. Without that familarity, he will be unable to deliver the correct restatement, opinion, and discussion requirements to achieve a passing score.
## Is oral communication more powerful than written communication?

  
  
Oral communication is believed to be more important than written communication. I totally agree with this statement, and this essay will explain why.  
  
People, who disagree with the idea that spoken communication is more beneficial than written communication, may argue that written communication is more accessible, as messages can be viewed anywhere. However, while it can be true in the day of old when letters are still the dominant way to get in touch, time has changed advanced technology nowadays allows users to communicate regardless of time and space; for example, within a click of mouse, people can make a video call through Facebook or other online apps to have a conversation with business partners or their friends and family. Therefore, with the help of technology, oral communication is becoming more effective than spoken communication.  
  
The reason why I am on the side of this idea is because spoken communication requires direct interaction between speakers . Therefore, the negotiation of meanings during the conversation will be facilitated, which is crucial for mutual understanding and reaching the decision. Such a thing can still be achieved in written communication when writers devote time and effort to convey the meaning of the message to readers by using precise grammar and vocabulary . However, this process can be simplified in face-to-face communication with the help of direct connection; therefore, oral communication is more efficient than written communication.  
  
In brief, it is much easier and more convenient to express ideas through spoken communication; as a result, oral communication plays a more vital role than the written ones in our life.
and this essay will explain why.  
Remember that the task accuracy score will be based on the clarity of your opinion. Therefore, when you say "this essay will explain why", you are missing out on increasing your TA score based on the proper opinion statement. A proper opinion statement is always supported by a supporting reason or reasons that will be expanded upon in the reasoning paragraphs. By adding reasons to the opinion, your opinion becomes clear, strong, and motivated.  
  
The reason why I am on the side of this idea  
No need to restate your agreement at this point. You should be reflecting this in the concluding summary instead. Kick this off with a direct topic sentence or begin the discussion immediately. Just don't reiterate your opinion yet.  
  
The essay is actually quite strong in terms of reasoning and explanations. The evidence / examples in support of the discussion are also relevant and highly effective. However, the concluding statement is a bit wanting in terms of format compliance. The 2 reasons need to be repeated in a paraphrased way in that section as well. Regardless, I do not see a reason why this essay will not get a passing mark if it were used in an actual test. The overall scoring requirements have been met well enough to recieve a slightly higher than average score.
***Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students.***  
  
## Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

  
  
Governments around the world have so far grasped the importance of international relationships and thus taken measures to work at them. In addition, the student exchange programme launched worldwide has emerged as a propitious method to meet this goal. The essay will examine the pros and cons of the exchange scheme and shed light on why I believe the benefits of it overwhelm the drawbacks.  
  
On the one hand, the advantage of becoming a foreign academic participant is twofold. Firstly, the programme accommodates a huge opportunity to step out of the comfort zone and obtain new perspectives. The prospect of the youths being in a bizzare area will stir them to engage themselves in the surroundings and thus enhance their understanding and appreciation of the culture. Secondly, students who manage to thrive on unprecedented circumstances while living abroad develop wondrous social skills. Being far away from home means that children are isolated from any assistance from homecountry, which in turn boost self-esteem and ability to cope with problems. Moreover, tackling daily issues somewhat equip them with employability skills that pave the way for a world of employment choice. For instance, a fresh graduate with an accredited overseas school's diploma is more highly-sought after by employers than the less fortunate.  
  
On the other hand, students who travel abroad for educational pursuits are susceptible to stress and depression. Seemingly, culture shock provoke the feeling of being kept out of the loop within adolescents; if they cannot get over the spiral of everlasting distress, their performances at school will deteriorate absurbly.  
  
Briefly, although exchange students might have difficulties adapting to unfamiliar school curriculums, I strongly advocate the exchange programme in that the benefits are remarkable.
Governments around the world  
Wrong reference. The prompt restatement will fail since it does not refer to the correct rephrasement that relates to the point of view of teachers to the international student exchange program. Do not change the original references, but use keywords in its place instead.  
  
In addition, the student exchange programme launched worldwide has emerged  
Do not offer any additional information in the prompt restatement + personal opinion paragraph. This plus the previous error will already assure that your tentative essay score is already within the failing range.  
  
The essay will examine the pros and cons  
I believe the benefits  
You are not going to get a TA passing score. You even altered the discussion from a direct advantage v. disadvantage discussion to a compare and contrast + personal opinion response. You definitely proved to the examiner that you did not understand the topic and you have no idea how to restate a simple statement in your own understanding. Your comprehension skills are questionable at this point.  
  
The overall discussion does not focus on the A v. D. discussion. You are using the pro and cons comparison discussion instead, which is not the discussion instruction for this essay. It will not get a passing score because you failed to provide the required discussion format.  
  
The response should have started with, *I believe that the program has more advantages than disadvantages. I base this opinion on 2 reasons....*
***Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves.***  
  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

  
  
Some people argue that religious or traditional festivals have been forgotten and these festivals serve as an occasion of enjoyment. While I agree that people in the modern world want to take festivals to relax, I believe that people still remember the values of these events.  
  
Festivals are always a great occasion to enjoy. People look forward to welcoming Christmas days, and on those days they often gather at home with other members to celebrate this occasion, which is the great one for people giving, presenting, and receiving gifts. Children will have wonderful memories with presents from Santa, and their parents also take advantage of this event to make decorations for their house. People could also take enjoyment in the Mid Autumn Festival, which happens in August of the lunar month, and adults and children could fulfill their satisfaction by eating moon cakes or seeing other young children carrying lanterns in the street.  
  
It could be wrong to assume that people have forgotten the core value of tradition and religion of festivals. In Viet Nam, young learners are still learning about the meaning of Mid Autumn Festival through reading lessons, and there are also activities held at school to remind them of the historical, traditional, religious values of them, which are practiced annually nationally. More than that, the good value of this event is also passed through the essential role of family on to the next generation by the word of mouth, which still preserves the meaning behind festivals  
  
In conclusion, although people show their interest in enjoyment of festivals, they are still not indifferent to the traditional and religious meaning of them.
While I agree  
I believe  
Fix the format of your response to fall more under the response format expectation. Combine these two sentences instead to reflect the measured degree of disagreement:  
  
I agree that... to the extent that I believe...  
  
This type of response presents an unmarked degree, but is still acceptable as a measured response response statement as it has a beginning and end reference to the emotional connection of your belief.  
  
The error of your response lies in the way that you fail to show that people actually still see the value of these events. You separated the relaxation from the learning discussion, causing a disconnect between the two. The more appropriate response was to explain that while the students learn about these events in the classroom, celebrating the actual event helps them do two things: (1) puts what they learned in class into practice and (2) ended up enjoying and relaxing as the excitement of the celebration caught up with them. These 2 considerations would have created a blended and cohesive discussion presentation that remained on focus with regards to the discussion topic.
## Will a Robot Take Your Job?

  
  
"Will a Robot Take Your Job?" I've recently hit upon this article and interestingly, I found that a heated argument surrounding this issue has already broken out. Some people claimed that AI - which stands for Artificial Intelligence -will take the place of human performance in the foreseeable future while the protestants of the other side of the argument insisted on the indispensability of human roles in the workforce. This writing is aimed to display the mixed reviews of the debaters and individual viewpoints on this matter as a go-between.  
  
In this day and age, it's not difficult to notice that an amazing number of human works has already been automated and a consensus among many experts is that this number is on the increase. Workers in industries ranging from healthcare to agriculture and industrial sectors can all expect to see disruptions in hiring due to AI. This mounting replacement can be ascribed to, according to the specialists, the high efficiency promoted and the large income generated by the machines. They also performed a simple calculation to illustrate this notion by comparing the amount and the quality of the products manufactured by the workers and robots in workplaces. Automobile companies are a satisfactory example, people surely couldn't produce cars that are as aesthetically pleasing, powerful and sophisticated as robots, therefore pale in comparison.  
  
On the other hand, it's also my firm conviction that humans will always be playing a significant and irreplaceable role in the workforce, no matter how innovative machines can become. My outlook to prove this proclamation and oppose the above concept is that we can only implement high-tech machines in certain professions. The medical field, for example, relates directly to human health and life, so we can't leave everything to those technological devices which sometimes can commit errors and cause subsequent harms to the patient. That's why simple robotic surgery still needs the supervision of real surgeons.  
  
To put it bluntly, the necessity of real human labor still outweighs all the state-of-the-art technologies and cannot be completely replaced in many years to come.
I assume that this is your response to the general IELTS discussion. I base this observation on the way that you are tackling the topic using the standard that discussion pornat and the fact that this IS an IELTS essay topic. Which leads me to qquestion why you altered the topic presentation by saying you recently read the article and, that you are going to be discussing the mixed reviles and individual viewpoints. This is a general discussion of your personal opinion so your estatement + response already fail due to the incorrect approach to the original presentation. The important thisis statement is missing. What is your opinion?  
  
The reasoning aspect can only recieve a scoring consideration for the part that says  
  
My outlook to prove this proclamation  
as this is the only prompt discussion compliant part. Sadly, it will not be enough for the essay to recieve a passing consideration.  
  
Remember the Golden Rules for IELTS Task 2 writing:  
- Never change the restatement topic and offer a personal opinion when implied.  
- Always focus on the personal opinion defense unless otherwise specified.