dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
## fast foods and their advertisements

  
  
Nowaday, advertisements play an important part in promoting the products to consumers. However, many people think that fast food companies should not be allowed to advertise, whereas others believe that all companies should have the right to advertise. From my perspective, all organizations, especially fast food enterprises should have an equal right to advertise because of the economic benefits.  
  
To begin with, any company needs to advertise its products to increase its sales and fame. People cannot access all products that are available in the store. By advertising, people will gain the information about the products and services, so that companies can have more buyers. For instance, the consumers can know the features of the products they have intention to buy before going to the store and consider what meets the demands of them. Additionally, advertisements also help many companies contribute to economic development. The more people buy, the more tax they have to pay for the government.  
  
In the current society, everyone tends to be busy doing their work or for other reasons. Many people are not able to prepare meals for their family or themselves. Therefore, a simple and convenient option is buying well served fast food because it is both fast and nutritious for a working day. For example, if people are in a hurry to go to work, they can buy bread and a coffee to save time. However, the consumers are also smart to choose the products that have a reasonable price. For these reasons, it is very essential for fast food companies to advertise their products.  
  
In a nutshell, advertisements provide many positive benefits for both the consumers and our society. However, it must be controlled by the government to improve health.
Ok. The essay is pretty much centered on the correct topic and reasoning discussion points. However, there is a section where there is a slight discussion topic confusion. In the first reasoning paragraph, the writer discusses advertising in relation to general goods. That is still advertising related but does not focus on the fastfood discussion from the prompt. The paragraph will not really recieve a score since it is not related to the topic as indicated. The essay needs to have stayed on track using 2 related discussion points. With only one related opinion explanation presented, the essay will be scored based on an under-developed reasoning presentation. The passing or failing of this essay will depend on the examiner's consideration of how much of the unrelated advertising paragraph he is willing to give a partial score to, if at all.
## young people mood

  
  
A negative mood is a common problem that almost all young people, particularly students at university and college, are facing. In fact, a high level of anxiety can lead to suicidal thoughts and behaviors and go on to affect a person throughout life. According to the result of investments, there are three primary reasons that cause the negative feeling.  
  
The most fundamental cause for pessimistic students is the intense pressure of study. Every day, they have to deal with a large number of assignments in class and deadlines at home, which make their brain continually activate and seriously damage in case it lasts for weeks and months. Additionally, when the exams approach, they constantly wake up all night to cram for their examination that they can have the state of insomnia. The core is also the significant factor that makes students particularly worry and increase the tension.  
  
The second reason, the relationship between students and people around them, makes a contribution to their negation. It can include relationships in their family and among friends. It is true that the regular argument of parents or separation of them has a profound influence on children's thoughts that lead to depression. Similarly, students can have some trouble building up eternal friendships or great love. While connections can make a person integrate into the world outside, they also can damage a person because of experiencing a relationship break-up.  
  
The final point that causes young people to feel depressed is environmental factors. Most university students are living far away from their families, so they usually feel incredibly alone and homesick thus. Moreover, they have to manage everything by themselves, such as spending, cooking, and dressing, which their parents carefully prepare as they are at home. Also, they get into difficulties from time to time; they try to deal with them without the support of their parents. For this reason, many students are suffering stress now.  
  
University students usually tend to be pessimistic about life events such as pressures, relationships, environmental factors. In addition, if anxiety goes on for a long time, they may face with depression or insomnia, which severely affects their mental health. Whatever the reasons, it is very paramount to confront this problem.
investments  
Investments are defined as the devoting, using, or giving of time, talent, emotional energy, etc., as for a purpose or to achieve something. This noun is an elementary level word that is not used in the proper reference in this sentence. Next time look up the word meaning before using it. This is an LR deduction.  
  
there are three primary reasons  
Give a summary of these reasons to complete the presentation. Summarize the discussion points. 2 reasons will suffice since this is only a 40 minute task. The essay is over-discussed and will not meet the time allowance during the actual test.  
  
negation  
Another word choice error. This is a midde school level noun that implies an act of denial, among other definitions, none of which apply to the meaning of the sentence the writer tried to imply.  
  
The writer is only at the beginner level of vocabulary usage.While his logic is proper, he is unable to choose the right words to use in expressing his thoughts.
## Funds for architectural infrastructure

  
  
Arguments regarding cities' infrastructure developments have gained much contemporary attention in recent years. A large amount of public budget being allocated for old buildings' refurbishments has raised much opposition since it is believed to be more worthy to spend such funding on building more houses and roads. From my perspective, I believe that the government funding should not be utterly focused on any development, but should be evenly divided for both such purposes.  
  
To commence with, constructing modern buildings and roads is claimed to be a superior mission for a range of factors. The first underlying reason behind this proposal is the proliferating demands of accommodations in metropolises nowadays. Owing to the urbanization occurring significantly in cities, dramatic escalations have been recorded in the numbers of urban populations and as a result, more houses are needed in order to accommodate citizens. Besides, establishing new streets may deliver social advantages, as well as the improvement in road safety. As new roads are introduced in municipalities, city-dwellers are presented with a plethora of options to travel during rush hours, which results in a significant reduction in the rate of traffic jams. Moreover, the figures of road accidents can be mitigated once overcrowding in particular roads is eradicated.  
  
On the other hand, renovating antique buildings in cities should also be placed emphasis on for several reasons. Firstly, such old institutions can become promising sources of income for cities. According to a survey, foreign travelers are inclined to visit and take pictures of local ancient and historical places; therefore, old buildings can be seen as cities' potential tourist sites. As a result, huge revenues can be made regularly by commercializing such constructions. Secondly, historical institutions can heavily stimulate artists' inner creativity with their antique beauty and underlying stories. For instance, a rich variety of pieces of fine arts were inspired by the image and structure, as well as the history of the famous One Pillar Pagoda in Hanoi and undoubtedly, they are highly appreciated and acclaimed by both the public and the critics.  
  
In conclusion, weighing both sides of the argument, I wholeheartedly believe that constructing new houses and roads as well as restoring old institutions are equally crucial in the development of cities and therefore, even amounts of money should be spent on both purposes.
The essay is well- written and addresses the prompt considerations quite well. The writer has a good grasp of the English language and has minimal grammar errors. The reasoning is sound based on believable reasons. It is obvious that he put great thought into the analysis of valid discussion points. The essay is well-developed. In as much as the writer did an admirable job in writing this essay, these are not all plus points that will result in an ideal score. The essay has a major flaw in the presentation, the word count.  
  
The main consideration for scoring well in this essay is the writing time. The essay needs to be concise and precise in writing style within 300 words or 40 minutes, whichever comes first. Ideally, the writer should be able to analyze the prompt, outline the discussion, and draft the essay within 30 minutes. The final 10 minutes should be spent proofreading and editing the essay. It is this writing procedure that helps meet the all important C + C requirements. 3-5 sentences, direct to the point, will produce the needed results.  
  
Do not overdiscuss as done in this presentation. Over-analysis does not help in a task 2 essay because the presentation tends to focus on unnecessary fillers and LR presentations as well. Balance the presentation across all requirements. The format I am suggesting can help achieve that.
## Average monthly spend on children's sports and participation in three sports

  
  
The line graphs illustrate how much money parents spent on their children's sporting activities, and how many children attended three kinds of sports, such as football, athletics, and swimming in Britain from 2008 to 2014.  
  
Overall, it is clear that the average monthly amount that parents spent on their children's playing sports increased sharply. Similarly, the number of children playing the three kinds of sports experienced a growth over the period shown. Especially, the statistic for swimming had the fastest rise.  
  
In 2008, British parents spent approximately 20 pounds monthly on their children's sports activities. Over the next six years, the average monthly spend went up steadily to around over 25 pounds in 2012 before reaching a peak at over 30 pounds in 2014.  
  
There were 500 thousand children practicing athletics, and 2 million children participated in swimming clubs in 2008. However, almost 8 million British children played football in 2008. After 2008, the number of children in Britain playing football remained relatively stable until 2014. In contrast, the figure for swimming participation increased dramatically to around 4 million children in 2014 and there was a fivefold increase in the the statistic for athletics in 2014, with nearly 5 million children.  
  
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The summary overview will recieve a failing score in 2 sections: TA and G R A. The reason? Lack of clarity in the summary due to a run-on presentation. Each line graph summary must be individually identified and presented. 5 sentences should have been used. The essay will have failed even before other considerations are applied. The overall presentation is difficult to follow. Since the writer does not refer to the image in the paragraph, further G RA deductions will apply based on the degree of confusing report presentations.  
  
The writer is only focused on completing the task in whatever way he can.That is why the essay clarity, focus, and coherence in relation to cohesiveness was affected negatively. This type of jinbled presentation may not pass the test.
## water use worldwide and water consumption in two nations

  
  
The charts below illustrate the amount of the global water use and the water expenditure in Brazil and Democratic Republic of Congo.  
  
Overall, from 1900 to 2000, it is easy to see that the global water needs rose significantly, especially in agriculture which had the highest number in the amount of water use. We can also see that the proportion of water expenditure is dramatically higher in Brazil than in Congo.  
  
In the first chart, the agriculture had a significant increase in water use from 500km3 to 1000km3 between 1900 and 1950, and then it continued its upward trend to reach a peak at 3000 inn 2000. While from 1900 to 1950, the industrial use and domestic use had a mild fluctuation in water needs, just nearly 1 km3, however, between 1950 and 2000, it increase swiftly to 1000km in industrial and under 500km3 in domestic.  
  
In the second chart, in 2000, the population of Brazil was 176 million and the population of Congo was 5.2 million. Brazil's water consumption, at 359km3, was much higher than Congo, at 8km3, it can be explained by the fact that irrigated land in brazil was 256 times higher than in Congo.  
  
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The writer must present the summary information based on 2 seperate images. Identify the different images and present one highlighted information for each image. Then a combination trending statement at the end. The summary data in current forum is confusing, lacking image identifiers, and does not provide a concise and coherent reporting paragraph.  
  
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Avoid using pronouns of any sort in a Task 1 essay. This is an analytical report of the general kind. Data, rather than opinions are presented. Pronouns usage suits a Task 2 essay response more.  
  
The writer presents the information in a manner that does not consider the coherence of the presentation. The grammar range falls unde ven-on developments only. A failing G R A score will be applied.
## NUMBER OF TICKETS SOLD FOR DIFFERENT SHOWS

  
  
The charts give information about how two specific groups in three countries bought concert, cinema and theater tickets online in the first three months of 2006, while present about the transport they used to access the Internet.  
  
Looking from an overall perspective, the first research bases on two age groups: 25-44 and over 65 years in AUS, the UK, and Malaysia. There were three primary means to purchase the ticket on the Internet: Desktop computer, laptop, and mobile phone.  
  
As the first chart portrays, the proportion of the sample in the age range 25-44 in AUS and the UK was equal, both of them outnumbered the age 65's figure at 47% and 40% in turn. Meanwhile, Malaysia's statistics showed a reverse pattern from the other countries, when approximately 40% of people over 65 years old bought tickets online throughout the time frame, which was 3-4% higher than the age 25.  
  
On the other hand, the desktop computer was predominating in the percentage in terms of accession means to buy tickets online owing to its figure contributed to 65%, 60%, and 58% in AUS, the UK, and Malaysia respectively. It is noticing that there was a similarity between the ratio of desktop and mobile phone in terms of the rank among those countries, but the proportion of the latter was less than somewhat 30-40%. In addition, 30% were accounted for the laptop's figure in the UK and 40% for each in AUS or Malaysia.
The summary overview is a confusing mess. It is a horribly developed runon sentence that fails to prove logical thinking, sentence structure control, and thought clarity. The writer has to learn to use clear single idea sentences to create a properly formatted content summary. The trending statement is also missing from the paragraph.  
  
Grammar Range and Accuracy problems feature prominently in this presentation. The incomprehensible information presentation causes stress for the reader, who has no idea where this report is headed. The uniter is so excited about presenting the information, he forgot about the importance of cohesiveness and coherence in the analysis. He tried out failed to develop a properly reported set of information. The essay fails in all 4 scoring sections.  
  
Prior to writing the next practice essay for task 1 , the writer should read sample responses first to better understand how to clearly report the information from the image / images. He will also learn how to properly present the tasks if he concentrates on sentence building and vocabulary excercises as well.
## The diagram explains the way in which aluminium cans are recycled.

  
  
Overall, there are six stages in the process, starting with collecting aluminium cans and being reused at the final stage.  
  
Looking at the flowchart, collected aluminium cans are brought to dumpsters. Then, they are delivered to a machine which cleans, sorts, shreds and undergo the compression step. Next, those are heated in a heating machine.  
  
After that, the aluminium liquid is rolled along a conveyor belt and turns into a flatten piece which is 2,5mm-6mm thick. Following this, those aluminium pieces travel to factories where they are manufactured into cans. Finally, those cans are reused again, which the number of recycled cans is at 74% in UK.  
  
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This will not get a passing score in an actual test due to the writer's failure to meet word count, paragraph formatting, and analytical report requirements. A summary overview or short report form is required in all Task 1 essays. This essay totally skipped that concise paragraph presentation. The writer jumped directly to the trending sentence, which is the last part of the summary overview. The summary overview cannot be assessed based on the trending sentence alone.  
  
There are only 108 words witten in a report meant to have at least 150 words. The result? Preliminary scoring deductions based on the missing word count. Additional deductions in the C + C section due to the under explained and analyzed data presentation. This is a 3 paragraph report composed of 3-5 sentences each. The writer needs to have an overall improvement in the aforementioned areas.
***Question:  
In some countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case.***  
## Do you think this is the positive or negative situation

  
  
In many nations, home ownership has been put a greater importance than renting ones. There are numerous factors that lead to this phenomenon and I believe that this can be a positive trend.  
  
The urge for owning a house can firstly be driven from human natural desire for prestige. It is common knowledge that only with the financial prosperity, can a person afford a house, therefore, the size and architect of an accommodation can reveal the social status as well as the wealth of the owner. Moreover, since human have always longed for recognition and admiration, house possession will foster their sense of pride and contentment. The second factor contribute to this trend is the need of stability. The financial burden of house renting can sometimes left people with enormous anxiety and depression. For example, amid Covid-19 pandemic, several laborers are made redundant and correspondingly lose their financial ability. As a result, they are not able to pay the rent to the landlord and some people even become homeless. Therefore, possessing a house will alleviate people nerve on the money insufficiency especially during economic crisis.  
  
From my perspective, I believe that the growing urge for home possession can create several positive results. Firstly, this will acts as an incentive for youngsters to make a great efforts in life. In metropolises, the price of houses is exorbitant, therefore, in order to purchase a house, people will have to do their best. Especially for young generations filled with great ambition and vibration, the desire for owning a house can boost their productivity and effort at work. Secondly, the torrent of people participating in real estate market can contribute to the thrive of economy on the whole. There can be a significant increase in the amount of housing taxes received thus enhance the national revenues. Furthermore, government will also have more budget to invest in other public services such as develop clinic or school facilities.  
  
In conclusion, the increasing importance of owning house can stem from human desire for respectability and stability and this trend can produce numerous positive influences on the life of citizens.
There are numerous factors that lead to this phenomenon and I believe that this can be a positive trend.  
There are 2 seperate sentence ideas here. This run-on is not good for the idea clarity in the presentation. Rather than using "and" present the response in 2 individual sentences instead. That will clearly show the seperation of idea presentations in relation to the prompt requirements.  
  
Since this is a personal opinion essay, do not be afraid to use first person pronouns throughout the presentation for a more active voice presentation. General formatsshould only be used in comparative essay presentations as those deal with public opimons rather than personal ones.  
  
This essay is developed well enough and should recieve a passing score since your ideas are all related to the original topic and required presentation format.
Here are my essay. I'm eternally grateful to you guys who help me with my writing.  
  
***Some people believe that an aging population is good for business, the economy, and society. Others disagree.***  
## Discuss both views and give your opinion.

  
  
An aging population is one of the most alarming issues among the countries in this day and age. While I can comprehend why a high rate of elderly citizens is conducive to numerous countries, my opinion is that this trend does more harm than good in the long run.  
  
It is understandable why many people perceive the greying population as a beneficial trend, particularly because the seniors can play an integral role in taking care of their grandchildren at home. As that most young parents are snowed under with their work, grandparents are usually family caretakers and babysitters. My grandfather is a salient example. He used to look after my brothers and me when we were little kids so that my parents could get to work. They even saved a large amount of money as my parents were hardly agitated about sending me to kindergarten thanks to the assistance of my grandfather. He is just one example of the many elderly who become the essential backups for young parent's careers and moral support for their children's fully upbringing process.  
  
Nevertheless, I suppose that the aging population is always associated with the scarcity of the workforce. The fact that people aged over sixty are no longer able to contribute to the thriving of a nation is undeniable. For instance, Japan, Korea, and other industrialized countries are facing a severe loss of labor force due to the rise of the greying population. Therefore, governments have to import overseas workers to burgeon their economies prosperously. There is no doubt that the more elderly citizens in the countries, the worse economic circumstances that many countries have to encounter.  
  
All things considered, for the reasons mentioned above, I would not agree the trend of a greying population is an upside.