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==> ... to detect cancer inside (a) human body.  
==>An explanation from (a) researcher, Tal Danino (...) to detect cancer even another disease(this sentence tend to make me confuse) .  
==> He developed a software ~~where~~(which) it can write algorithm ...  
==> ... assisted the colony (in spreading out to detect disease that phenomenon ...)(to spread out to detect disease that phenomena he called a supernova. )  
==> ... Bacteria grew naturally in (the) human body and sent (a) signal to the machine and the detect(ed) cancer or treat. It will be (a) benefit to detect cancer and other disease(s) in the future.  
  
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This summary is extracted from wired.com and was published by Jennifer Chausse. People who stayed in Brazilian Amazon village believed that hot acai porridge or other type of spicy food are able to cool down human body. A scientist from University of Ottawa have been worked for this myths to find out the proper mechanism. The result of the research was body temperature can flow out the body through the evaporation of sweat. Sweat is body's natural response to heat and likely heat or energy leaving the body. This can explain when someone drinks something hot then automatically stimulate body to start sweating in order to release some of that heat. Now, the principal turns out people can really fight fire with fire.
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==> **This summary is extracted from wired.com and was published by Jennifer Chausse** (it's okay you try to mention the source, but you only have to write down the link at the below --> Source: ww.wired.com/xxxxxxxxxx).  
  
==> ... hot acai porridge or other type(s) of spicy food are able ...  
==> A scientist from (the) University of Ottawa have been ...  
==> ... hot then automatically stimulate (the) body to start sweating ...  
Now, the principal turns out (that) people can really ...  
  
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The Surprising History Behind the Scary Clown Phenomenon  
  
Long time ago, the crepy clowns had been appear, fisrt of all the clowns were marginal grouphs society in America. They always funy dressed but they make up the face with freak style. This phenonema not only occur in the USA but also in the several countries. The clowns popular as scary creaturs because their style was very stranger in the society. In the 19 century, the scary clowns popular as criminal. Therefore they are popular as crepy creatures. Spreading of the scary clowns are very rapidly. During the 19 century, they became enemies in the several country. However, After 19 century, condition of clowns became better than the 19 century, Charles Dickens london flokflore member grouph changed of scary clowns became the real clowns. In the 20 century, clowns industrys have been rapidly develop, sighting of scary clown in 20 century are hoaxes. The police had arrests all of scary clowns and right now, the clowns will be favourite entertainment in the USA and in the several countries.
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==> (a)(or you can mention Years ago) Long time ago, the cre(e )py clowns had been appear (ing/ed? depend on the time),  
  
==> fi~~s~~ r(s) t of all the clowns were marginal group~~h~~ s society in America.  
==> They always ~~fun(n)y dressed~~(tend to make me confuse--> they always dress uniquely)~~but~~(and) they make up ~~the~~(their) face with freak style.  
  
==>This~~phenonema~~(phenomenon--> singular) not only occur in the USA but also in the several countries.  
==> The clowns (were-->past tense) popular as scary creatur(e) s because their style was very stranger ~~in the~~(among) society.  
==> Therefore they are popular as cre(e) py creatures.  
==> Spreading of the scary clowns ~~are~~(is) very rapidly.  
==> ... they became enemies ~~in the~~(among/ between) several count~~ry~~(ies--> several-->plural) .  
==>However, After 19 century, (the) condition of clowns became better than ~~the 19 century~~ (before--> you have done mention it),  
==> Charles Dickens (L--> capital for place name)~~l~~ ondon ~~flokflore~~(folklore) member group~~h~~(this sentence tend to make me confuse)(Charles Dickens is a member of London's folklore group has) changed of scary ..  
  
==>In the 20 century, clowns industr~~y~~(ie) s have been rapidly ...  
The police had arrest~~s~~(ed--> had need V3) all of (the) scary clowns and right now,  
==> ... and in the several countries (later) .  
  
\*be aware with plural and singular  
\*you have done several typos  
\*your sentence structure sometimes tends to make reader confuse, try to make it easily to understand  
  
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The Taklimakan Desert covered with eighty-five sand dunes, which has size around 337,600 square kilometers. Although it consists of almost 100% sand dunes, it does not mean that there is no plant there. There are three plants that life in this desert, Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramosissima, and Alhagi sparsifolia.  
  
Firstly, Populus euphratica, the tallest tree in the Taklimakan ecosystem, has long root functioned to absorb water far away from the tree existed. Also, this species plays a role in controlling evaporation throughout either its stomata which generally open during the day while photosynthesis at that tree processing or tiny pores on the leaf surface.  
  
Secondly, there is Tamarix ramosissima that commonly known as a tamarisk or salt cedar. It uses water in an enormous amount by root system that can absorb far away and has root size many times rather than that plant. In addition, it has as the same evaporation regulation like that happens on Populus euphratica leaf.  
  
Lastly, the species that grow prolifically in the Taklimakan desert, Alhagi sparsifolia, utilize a huge amount of water during the summer. Some its root absorbs water about sixteen meters depth. Contrarily, this species open and close its stomata relying on the leaf surface conditions rather than two species above.  
  
As explained above, the plants that life in this desert, Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramosissima, and Alhagi sparsifolia, have quite similar in large absorption of water. They have adapted in surviving living in the desert that can be noticed from their roots form.
Hi Asma!  
  
nice to see your writing there...  
  
~~The~~ Taklimakan desert is covered with eighty~~-~~ five percent sand dunes, ~~which has size around~~approximately 337,600 square kilometers. (this is more like it)  
  
has root size many times ~~rather than that plant~~over to other plants.  
  
Some its root absorbs water about sixteen meters depth= some of its roots absorb~~s~~ water about sixteen meters ~~depth~~deep .  
  
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**The jobs we'll lose to machines - and the ones we won't (TED Summary)**  
  
Some scientists from University of Oxford released result of study about the future of work. They concluded that almost one in every two job have a high risk of being automated by machines. As we know, machine have power to learn everything from data and process it same as like what human do. On the past few years, machine learning grow rapidly to able doing more complex tasks. People will have no chance to compete with machines on frequent or high-volume tasks. But we still have something that machines can not do, it is tackle novel situations. So, whatever people decide to do, let every day bring a new challenge therefore we still can stay ahead of the machines.  
  
by Anthony Goldbloom  
Source: TED
Hello Fauzankrn,  
I would like to give some correction on your essay.  
  
machine has power to learn everything from data.  
  
..., machine learning grows rapidly to be able ...  
  
... that machines cannot do, it ~~is~~ tackles novel situations."  
  
Please make sure how to use singular and plural noun, and also about subject-verb agreement. I hope my corrections help your next essay better.  
  
Keep writing Fauzankrn :)
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==> Some scientists from (the) University of Oxford released (the) result of study about  
==> ... almost one in every two job(s) have a high risk of ...  
==> As we know, machine(s) have (the) power to learn ...  
==> .., machine learning grow(s) rapidly to able doing ...  
==> ... that machines can not (afford to) do, it is  
==> ... bring a new challenge(,) therefore we still can stay  
  
\*be aware with singular and plural.  
\*learn about where you need "the"  
  
Overall, you have done great  
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Two developing countries in Asia, India and Indonesia have same problems about tax revenue. India where have more over 1 billion people only have a few tax revenue approximately 1 million rupees while Indonesia's 255 citizens number, there 27 million people are registered. Both countries have GDP ratio number at 11 percent. Regarding this issues, India's government has expected to collect in 4.4 billion dollar from the 64,275 taxpayers which targeted people who live and worked in overseas. In addition, India just paid 373 million dollar from 633 people who owned up. Whereas Indonesia which is trying an amnesty tax. A number 328,000 people have taken advantage when tax amnesty launched in July which ended in September. The taxpayer are politicians and businessmen. They are suspect hidden their wealth and save money in overseas bank.
Hello PHA2016,  
I would like to give some corrections on your essay.  
  
... dollar from the 64,275 taxpayers**,** which targeted people ...  
Explanation: You have to put comma after 'which' because this clause is related to the India's government and not to the 'taxpayers'.  
The taxpayers are politicians and businessmen.  
Please make sure about subject-verb agreement.  
  
Keep writing PHA2016 :)
**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.  
To what extent do you agree or disagree?  
What other measures do you think might be effective?**  
  
Finding the best method to tackle traffic and pollution problems has been a debatable issue in recent years. It is argued that government should set up higher price of petrol to solve these problems. I do agree with this initiative issue since citizens will be reluctant to travel by their private cars if the petrol price is more expensive. However, introducing car free day is an alternative way in order to minimize traffic and pollution.  
  
Establishing less affordable petrol will reduce the number of private cars in the road significantly, meaning that minimizing the frequency of traffic jam and the amount of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere. Once this policy introduced, individuals will be more selective in deciding whether they have to riding a car or using public transport. A 2010 recent study of Harvard University reveals that people in Beijing were not likely travelling by their cars because they avoided spending huge budget for transport cost, particularly paying the high price of petrol in their country. This resulted in a few evident of people who trapped in traffic jam for hours, and a fresher air in Beijing in recent years.  
  
Having said that, car free day is the other way to tackle both traffic jam and deteriorated air problems. This is due to the fact that the car is the key factor of traffic jam and the main contributor of gas emission. Obviously, since can free day has been established in Tokyo, it showed is a significant decrease in the number of traffic jam and carbon dioxide emission. Clearly, car free day is a worth effort to keep healthier air and more straightforward travel.  
  
In conclusion, when set higher price of petrol could discourage people to drive their private vehicles in which can streamline the travelling time and minimize the amount of poisonous gases in the atmosphere. Also, the authority can establish car free day to reduce the problems related to both issue. Hopefully, citizens can participate actively to support this policy.
Hi llmi\_03,  
Your essay is very good. However, I think there are some minor mistakes:  
  
... in deciding whether they have to ~~riding~~drive a car or ~~using~~use public transport.  
  
This resulted in ~~a~~ fewer evident of people who...  
  
... in Tokyo, it showed ~~is~~ a significant decrease in the number of ...  
Clearly, car free day is ~~a~~ worth an effort to ~~keep~~make healthier air and ...  
  
Please kindly let me know if I have made some mistakes
IELTS WRITING TASK 1 CEMENT AND CONCRETE PRODUCTION  
  
The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.  
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  
  
As we can see, there are two types of diagrams. The first one is about cement making and the other one is the next stage is how produce a concrete - after the cement is created. Both of them is an important features to make a building like an apartment.  
  
If a contractor want to build an apartment or housing area, the first they need is cement. To produce cement, there are two raw materials such as limestone and clay. They are being crushed until become powder before being mixed. As the mixed compound enters the next step, it flows into rotating heater and the heat burns the materials. The last stage is finishing by put it into bags after the grinder turns the materials into cement.  
  
The second stage after cement production is concrete making. Containing 15 percent of cement and 10 percent of water, concrete mixer is being shook by adding the others materials such as one in quarter of sand and a half of gravel which the ingredients is small stones. Those concrete mixed will move around util all of the components are become strong liquid as we call it concrete.  
  
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**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?**  
  
Congestion and high gas emission are the hard problems which happen in the city center. The government try to increase the cost of the petrol to reduce them. I disagree with the regulation such increasing the high price of the petrol can reduce the problems which is because the urban workers choose a car for a journey based on the time efficiency than using public transport. Meanwhile, there are other solutions to reduce that problems though minimizing private cars and improving public transports.  
  
High cost of petrol is not effective regulation to minimize congestion and air pollution in the city center. Now than, some workers using private cars for their journeys are caused by that are more efficient than using public transportation. As a result, the high price of petrol is not the best regulation to solve the problems. In 2010, the scientists in New York conducted research about how correlation between high the petrol cost and worker behavior for utilizing personal cars. They found out that 5% samples agreed that it reduce their mobility while 75% samples that regulation unaltered their choices to use private cars because it is faster than using another way. Having said that, increasing price of the petrol correlates with high price of productions and it delivers to new problems such an expensive price in public transport.  
  
The other solutions which can be more effective to solve the problems are reducing private cars and improving high facilities in public transports. Which is because the half of gas emission and congestion are caused by using personal cars and adverse facilities in the public transport. The Indian Government in 2011 have success to reduce at 50% of traffic and air pollution by decreasing one person-one car and increasing comfortable facilities in the buses and trams.  
  
In conclusion, increasing the price of petrol is not the best solution to solve traffic jam and gas emission in the city center. I personally believe that the problems are caused by most worker use one person-one car than utilizing public transports. The alternative solutions to reduce it though reducing the level of using personal cars and encouraging public transports in the city center.
**writing task 1 IELTS 8 test 3 how to produce cement and concrete**  
  
The diagrams present information about how the cement is produced and how to create concrete based on the combination of cement. The most noticeable fact that the cement production is processed by six steps that are crusher, rotating heater, heat, grinder, and bags. Meanwhile the concrete is created by five materials which are mixed.  
  
The process to create the cement is begun from the limestone and the clay which are crushed by crusher. The powder as result of crushing process are mixed and then is rotated in rotating heater. The next process, the powder is heated in the heater afterward the mixture was grinded and become the cement. The final process that the cement are packaged in the bags and the cement ready to sell.  
  
In addition, the process how cement is used to produce the concrete for building purposes are by using the concrete mixer. There are four base materials to produce it which consist of 15% cement, 10% water, 25% sand and 50% gravel. The next step that all materials is mixed and finally the concrete ready to use.  
  
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The process to create the cement is begunTHE PROCCESS OF CREATING CEMENT IS BEGUN from the limestone and the clay ...  
The next processBEFORE THE FINAL PROCCESS , the powder is heated in the heater ...  
  
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One of preeminent innovations in term of contemporary agriculture established a couple years ago and officially launched yesterday was seawater greenhouse. situated in Port Augusta region, this greenhouse is manufactured to solve the problem about Scorching summer temperatures and arid area. it alternates all of pivotal elements in common *agroecosystem*, such as ground water, pesticide, fertilizer and even soil can be interchanged by coconut husk because there is no any plant or crop can be planted on that marginal soil like desert. That a 20-hecatare field is irrigated by desalinated seawater. A solar-powered desalination,23.000 sunlight-reflected mirror toward a 115-meter high receiver tower, reduce the acidity of seawater and supply fresh water to the crops through the pipe particularly tomatoes and produce approximately 39 megawatts energy. This panel also acts as heater control and keep the favorable temperature for the crop inside greenhouse. The Harvested tomatoes from 18.000 trees have started being sold in nearest supermarket.  
  
Initiated by Sundrop Farm Australia, Philipp Saumweber as its CEO, this greenhouse was purposed to clear up and energy-limed resources such as fossil fuel. Furthermore, it is also relied to diminish the emission exhausted by usual factory related solar reservoir, although it is more economically high-cost namely $ 200 million for all infrastructures. according to Saumweber "the cost will pay off long-term".
Hello Ifan,  
  
... and officially launched yesterday which was seawater greenhouse.  
  
situated in Port Augusta region [your sentence not complete] , this greenhouse is ...  
  
~~That~~This a 20-hecatare field is ...  
  
This panel also acts as heater to control and keep ...  
  
... solar reservoir, although it ~~is~~ was more economically ...  
  
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The logging industry gives many negative effects to environment. Those are the wild broken, contaminating air, and unstability weather. That effect will be happened in land and water.  
  
Trees have parts of their body that can give life to all creature in the word. The parts of their body will devide two part. There are stick and root. The sticks including leaves give a home to all animals because they can life or stay there. The root decrease scraping of ground. More over, the root of trees which plant in side river will push the developing algae. So the wild is not break.  
  
Trees have leaven that change carbon dioxide to oxygen. The trees can be filtered air. The trees decrease contaninating air. More over, the good air gives positive side to atmosphere. If oxygen is more then carbon dioxide, the weather will be stable. Oxygen and weather have strong relation. The much oxygen is, the more stable the weather is.  
  
Wooden is important to preserve a natural resource because wooden give a life to all creaturs in this world.
Hello herlysa,  
  
The logging industry ~~gives~~ gave many negative ...  
  
Those ~~are~~ were the wild broken, ... (use past tense because you cited from another source)  
  
The trees decreased contaninating air.  
  
Wooden ~~is~~ was important to (...) because ~~wooden~~ it was~~give~~ gave a life to all ... [avoid repetition ]  
  
NB: you should be careful in your tenses  
  
hope these help
Eco-entrepreneur, Shubhendu Sharma talk on TED with an appealing topic trying to share his experience on making forests professionally in just 10 years. He was an industrial engineer before he decides to work with nature. His first experience working with nature is when he made a forest in his backyard house. He has a view that forests do not have to be spacious nature reserves and outlying from our lives. Yet, forests can become part of our lives right where we are even in town. To make it become true, you can start it from the soil. You can perform an analysis of the soil and seek for the deficiency which may inhibit the seedling to grow and do something to make it better or to keep the soil moist. Aside from the soil, other elements are needed as well as water, sunlight and nutrition to grow the native trees of the place; and divide them into shrub layer, sub-tree layer, tree layer and canopy layer. When the trees begin to grow, make sure to take care of them by watering and removing the weeds on the ground for at least 2 years. For the rest let the nature works.
hello abu  
  
~~Eco-entrepreneur,~~ Shubhendu Sharma-as a Eco-entrepreneur~~talk~~performanced on TED with an appealing topic~~,~~he try~~ing~~ed to share about his experience on ...  
  
... engineer before he decide~~s~~d to work ~~with~~by nature. His first experience working ~~with~~by nature ~~is~~was when he made a forest ...  
  
He ha~~s~~d a view that forests do not have ...  
Yet, the forests can (...) where we ~~are~~were even in town.  
  
To make it becomes true, you can start ...  
... inhibit the seedling to grow and to do something to make ...  
  
actually, I saw that this your writing is difficult to understand because too much words which have you used anyway.
Hello,  
Here some input for you.  
  
... Sharma talk*ED* on TED with an appealing topic ...  
He ~~was~~*had been* an industrial engineer before he decide~~s~~**D** to work**ING** with nature. His first experience ~~working with nature is~~*was started* when he made a ...  
  
He ha~~s~~*D* a view that forests do ...  
... part of our lives right ~~where we are~~ even **we live** in *the* town.  
... from the soil~~.~~*by*~~You can perform an~~~~analysis~~*analyzed*~~of~~ the soil and seek*ing* for the deficiency (...) to grow and ~~do something to make it better or~~ to keep the soil moist.  
  
... elements are needed ~~as well as~~*such as* water, sunlight (...) the native trees ~~of the place~~ ; and divide them ...  
  
**Good Luck!**
Hello Abu Gosok,  
  
... Sharma talked on TED with ~~an~~ appealing topic by trying to share his ...  
  
~~His~~in the first experience hehave been working with nature is ...  
  
To make it become true, you can start it from the soil [confusing sentence]  
  
... for the deficiency which may be inhibitedof the seedling to grow and ~~do something~~ to make it better ...  
  
Hope these help