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**TOPIC**: Task 2:  
It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaur, dodo...) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening.  
  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  
  
People have different views on animals that are in danger of extinction. It is argued that there is no reason why people should protect animal species because it is a natural process for them to become extinct. I strongly disagree with this argument and will support my argument in the essay below.  
  
Firstly, not only the natural process but also humans cause the extinction of countless species. Humans have burned forests, cut down trees for different purposes such as agriculture, industrial factories,... As a result, there is no doubt that these activities have devastated the natural habitats of wildlife, endangered the survival of the Earth's flora and fauna. In addition, the increased demand for animal products such as skin, horns,...leads to the rampant poaching of wild animals. For example, the rhino horn is used as a status symbol to display success and wealth in some Asian countries, so poachers often hunt them. Therefore, rhinos are at risk that can be wiped out.  
  
Secondly, animals play an important role in the balance of the ecosystem so people need to rectify the situation of mass extinction. Everything in nature is connected, if a species becomes extinct, other animals and people will suffer as the food chain. What is more, animals have aesthetic and socio-cultural values. They contribute to our rich bio-diversity that makes this planet great and beautiful to live in. Another point is that in numerous places around the world, many types of animals play an important role in different cultures. For example, in some religions, cows are revered and worshiped as gods.  
  
In conclusion, the disappearance of many animal species occurs as a consequence of our doings. Their extinction will have a severe influence on different aspects of our life. Accordingly, we should preserve wild animal species on Earth in order to have a better life in the future.
This is only an extent essay. It is not a cause and effect discussion. Therefore, the first reasoning paragraph that deals with the cause and effect of animal extinction is invalid, As that paragraph does not relate to the given discussion question, the examiner shall disregard that paragraph and leave it unscored. It will limit the scoring possibility in terms of:  
  
- coherence and cohesiveness  
- task applicability of all responses  
- Discussion accuracy  
  
These will be the reasons why the discussion will be scored based on a lack of properly developed opinion reasoning. The second, applicable paragraph will be scored as a part of the relevant discussion. The with needs to review punctuation usage rules. Punctuation marks are never used successively and ellipses are not used in academic writing. Proper punctuation usage is a major scoring consideration so these must always be used within the correct parameters.
## saturated fat, sodium and added sugar in meals

  
  
The pie charts show percentage of daily intake of 3 nutrients,namely sodium,saturated fat and added sugar which the average person in the USA consumes in each meal.  
  
It is clear that people consume a large of proportion of sodium,saturated fat at dinner and added sugar at snack.All of them have the lowest percentage of consumption at braekfast.  
  
Dinner and lunch contain the highest proportion of both sodium(43% for dinner,29% for lunch) and saturated fat(37% for dinner,26% for lunch).By contrast,the consumption of added sugar at lunch and dinner are lower,with only 23% and 19%.  
  
Turning to breakfast and snack which has comparable percentages,they were both made up of 14% sodium.For saturated fat,there is 21% consumed at snack and 16% at breakfast.Snacks tend to be sugary,with 42% of added sugar and 16% of breakfast to be made up of sugar.
The writer ensured that this essay will be awarded a failing score based on lack of word count at the very start of the scoring process. All essays that contain less than 150 words will not meet the minimum passing requirements for the task. This can be corrected by not using compressed information sentences in the presentation. Expanding the paragraph content by using longer analysis presentations and comparative discussions can help with the word count situation. It will also help create more focused reporting sections and a better connected discussion in every paragraph. The aim, is to complete a quick report through the use of at least 3 sentences per paragraph. The current presentation only indicates data but does not offer any reference to the writer's analytical skills which are requirements for higher study students in the western and European part of the world.
## enquiry methods in numbers

  
  
The provided line graph represents information about the figure for distinct methods by which questions were asked for the Tourist Information Office in a specific city in the first half of 2011.  
  
A glance at the supplied graphs reveals that the requirement sent by telephone and in person increased a sharply upward trend compared to a gradual decline by letter or email by the Tourist Information Office in a municipality within a time span of the first 6 months of 2011.  
  
It is worth noting that making enquiries by telephone commenced from the bottommost mark by a little less than a half million, retained growth, and had an enormous surge to reach the vertex at roughly 2 million as an ending. The number of enquiries received in person started at the highest level, followed by a decrease from 900 to very nearly 800 in February before going to the doubled figure for enquiries in June.  
  
On the other hand, it was quite the opposite of the data on the number of questions received by letter/email which experienced a constant drop until the end of the given period and touched the all-time low at around 400 queries.  
  
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The summary overview goes at a confusing rate. Scoring is not only based on thought clarity, but sentence clarity as well. A clear sentence is defined as ; a grammatical unit of one or more words that expresses an **independent statement,** question, request, command, exclamation, etc., and that typically has a subject as well as a predicate. The sentence must contain only one of each to pass as either simple or complex versions with some conjunction usage to connect related ideas. A combination of several representations of each component is a run- on. A run-on lacks wherence and cohesiveness. The summary overview fails to provide a succint sentence representation of the paragraph. It has failed in its objective to inform the reader. Sadly, the overall presentation contains the same problems. Why is the writer opting to not analyze the information? Why is he rushing to and the task in a manner that risks a failing score?
## Government should spend money on railways rather than roads

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***To what extent do you agree or disagree***  
  
Transportation is of utmost importance to any nation's coordination. However, the question of whether investors should focus more on railways rather than roadways has incurred much debate. I agree with the idea of supporting rail-based traveling.  
  
First and foremost, complications due to the prevalence of private automobiles can be circumvented via railroads. The growing urban population has long put a toll on cities' routes, sets off a cascade of pollution, phantom traffic jams, and road fatalities. These undesirable effects can be countered if public transportation such as subways and high-speed lines are in vogue. By easing roads' density, mass transit intrinsically reduces the release of toxic fumes, improves air quality, and prevents casualties. For instance, densely populated cities like Tokyo, New York, and London have promoted a cost-efficient system of subways that ensures hygiene, punctuality, and convenience. These cutting-edge devices have grown rapidly in quantity and quality, catering for not only customers but also the nation's environmental health.  
  
Secondly, public transportation is a lucrative sector to invest in. By embracing nature's stability, the modern railway system cuts down the cost of environment revitalization, allocating that amount to improving its infrastructure and attracting commuters. Boosts in ticket sales then increase employees' remuneration, not to mention decimating unemployment rates, creating a flourishing image for the nation in foreign visitors' eyes while pouring interest money into investors' pockets. Railroads also act as a benefactor to customers by granting moral absolution to the ones who are environmentally concerned, providing safety and amenity at a much lower cost than road-based transportation. Viewed panoramically, promoting rail lines is a win for all concerned.  
  
To recapitulate, surely all forms of travel have advantages worth investing in. Nevertheless, I believe the ascent of systematic railways is an all-rounded perk for society.
More familiarity with the response requirements of various prompt instructions will help the writer understand the response format requirement. Every question needs a specific response. A measured response cannot be used in an ordinary agree or disagree essay. While a measured extent response cannot be used for an ordinary agree or disagree essay either. This is the primary presentation mistake in this presentation. An ordinary response was used where an extent was specified.  
  
Since the discussion format is incorrect but a related response was provided, the essay will recieve a portion of each scoring criteria. A full score can only be awarded when a proper response format is used. The essay might, there is no assurance that it will , recieve a base passing score.
## In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more available.

  
***Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?***  
  
Whether convenience food is increasing low-priced and more popular in a number of nations ignites a heated debate. Quite a few people believe that it is affordable and convenient for engaged people while others cling to that junk food is detrimental to people's health. I am of the belief that this tendency has both positive and negative effects on the growth.  
  
On the one hand, there are several primary justifications why fast food offers numerous benefits. Firstly, one of the significant advantages of fast food is that it is prepared and served quickly, convenient, and reasonable prices. Facts have shown that the prices average of a serving of fried chicken in KFC restaurants is about five dollars, which only waste of five minutes to cook, while preparing these meals at home we need to spend a lot of hours to go to supermarkets and cooking, and even higher costs. Secondly, emotionally, junk food bestows to satisfy children's craving. In addition, convenience food restaurants were decorated with beautiful interior, which bring about comfortable and attractive for teenagers. To illustrate, my niece who is really enjoyable every weekend when her parents take her to the Jolibe fast food restaurant.  
  
On the other hand, however, there are some convincing reasons why convenience food brings substantial drawbacks for people's health. To begin with, consuming fast food leads to several serious diseases for people. Scientific studies have indicated that fast food is high in saturated fats and added sugars, calories, and processed preservatives, whereas low vitamins and minerals. As a consequence, it causes directly life-threatening illnesses such as high blood pressures, heart attacks, and cancer, which threaten seriously to people's health. Another disadvantage of convenience food is that depending on fast food results in sluggish habits, sedentary lifestyles, contributing to increasing obesity proportion in children. This leads heavy pressures to the medicine and healthcare systems, negatively affects the social development.  
  
In conclusion, notwithstanding offering several benefits, junk food bestows plentiful of extreme drawbacks for people's health.
## It is neither possible nor useful to provide university places for a high proportion of young people

  
  
Some people might argue that providing tertiary education for the majority of young people is not possible and useful. Personally, I disagree with these ideas and will outline my reasons in the essay below.  
  
Nowadays, obtaining a university degree no longer has a vital role to get a good job in the future of young people even in this knowledge-based society. Firstly, in recent years, the demand for labor who gain specific skills or practical skills is increasing rapidly, which opens the door to better career prospects as well as job security for graduates of vocational school. These make vocational education more popular among young people, become a substitute for academic courses. Secondly, if the government intervenes deeply in the structure of the labor market, that would cause imbalances in the workforce because it could not only lead to an abundance of university graduates who are less likely to choose blue-collar jobs such as machine operators or technicians but also cause the shortage of skilled workers.  
  
On the other hand, I think that it is impossible to support a large number of young people to be admitted to college. On top of that, paying for all exorbitant education costs will put a financial burden on the national budget. The government is likely to face a high risk of a budget deficit. Viet Nam, in fact, is a developing country with limited resources the government needs to allocate its national budget properly for other key areas which also promote sustainable development, such as the economy and healthcare. Additionally, the limitation of the human resources and material facilities, which has not kept pace with the soaring number of students on campus, leads to the degradation of tertiary education.  
  
I conclusion, I strongly oppose the idea of dispensing university education to a high proportion of young people owing to the arguments presented above
The writer offers a basic disagreement rather than the required emotional extent response As asked by the discussion prompt. The writer must provide a degree of support to help convince the reader of his conviction in his point of meer. The response format is incomplete and also, could be considered incorrect by some examiners. The scores are affected when expected response formats are not used by the writer when creating the thesis sentence. Always provide proper response to avoid partial or non - application of section scores.  
  
The response paragraphs are comparative where single opinion presentations are needed. The whole point is to convince the reader that the disagreement is the correct opinion. However, using a comparison that gives support to both ideas destroys the previously stated opinion. Where there was once a clear opinion, only a questionable opinion is seen by the lader. This will cause the essay to not fulfill opinion clarity requirements and instead be scored based on a confusing and stressful presentation..
## electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012

  
  
The line graph represents the amount of electricity generated in France by four forms of sources during the period of 32 years, starting from 1980.  
Overall,electrcity produced by nuclear station accounted for the highest amount over the period shown, as the primary source of electricity. By contrast, this figure for the remaining means of electricity generation leveled off.  
  
In 1980, It is clear that thermal power was used to produce well over 100 terawatt hours of electricity. At the same time, hydroelectric and nuclear station just generated about 75 terawatt hours of electricty, but there was no electricity produced by renewables power.  
  
Between 1980 and 2005, the amount of electricity generated by nuclear station rose drammatically by nearly 300 terawatt hours and reached the peak of under 450 in 2005. However, there was a negligible rise of 25 terawatt hours of electricty produced by renewables power from 2000 to 2012. Even though thermal power overtook nuclear power in the year of 1980, that statistics remained stable for the rest of period.  
  
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The measurement reference should have been mentioned in the summary overview. It was, afterall, mentioned specifically in the report title and above the live graph in the image presentation. It is considered the default reference for all 4 power sources. Always double check the image data. A highlighted representation must always be included in the summary report to add accuracy to the short form presentation.  
  
Review conjunction usage rules. "But" is a conjunction used to contrast a related discussion topic. Since a new electricity source is mentioned in the second paragraph towards the end, a conjunction cannot be used. A new sentence would have worked better.
*TOPIC:  
**Some people believe that for school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than parents.  
Others argue that parents are not less important.***  
## Discuss both views and give your opinions.

  
  
While some people believe that teachers have a greater bearing on school-aged children's cognitive and social development than parents, others argue that the role of parents is of the same importance as that of teachers. I side with the latter view.  
  
On the one hand, teachers have a monumental role in children's comprehensive development. School-aged children can gain insights into the world and have the ability to reason thanks to the knowledge that teachers impart. Students are also taught moral codes and social etiquette at schools. The basic knowledge and moral lessons which students receive from their teachers would be the main factors determining children's future life. Therefore, it is justifiable why many people believe teachers have a dispensable role in children's cognitive and social development.  
  
However, it would be imprudent to downplay the role of parents in helping the young become academically and socially capable.  
Teachers provide students with a wealth of knowledge, however, their efforts would be futile if students did not revise their lessons due to the lack of parents' supervision. In addition, as children spend most of their time with their parents, they may be influenced by their parents' behaviors although these actions may contradict the virtues taught at schools. For example, a kid raised by abusive parents may have the tendency to be violent later on in his life because this child imitated their parents' actions during his childhood. Therefore, parents also have a significant influence on children's personal growth.  
  
In conclusion, I would contend that efforts from both teachers and parents would help children to be intellectually and socially capable.
The writer has misled the reader into thinking that only his opinion should be presented in the discussion. Both points of view come from a general personal presentation without 3rd group pronoun usage.The essay therefore, reflects only the writer's thoughts, negating the public opinion. The writer should use proper pronoun references to indicate an analysis of the opinions leading to the development and explanation of his personal insight.  
  
The writer provided a personal opinion at the start but did not expand the discussion to represent how his thoughts add support and value to the public opinion he sides with. The essay can only recieve partial scoring due to the missing points previously mentioned.  
  
The essay must provide a clear representation to group thought before individual thought. Although well-written, the format needs more work.
## how to start being professional in the badminton?

  
  
If you are suffering with do not know how to start playing badminton like a professional, for everyone is a universal phenomenon. Because badminton is mainly an indoor game, but it can also be played outside casually. Badminton knows as a racquet sport, which means the players need suitable shoes and racquets to play it. Therefore, to start being professional in this sport we need process training and a basis for the beginner that I am about to show you in this essay.  
  
To begin with badminton, we need a racquet and shoes for the match. Nowadays, there are many kinds of badminton brands in the world, which you will have a lot of options and prices to choose from. For instance, Yonex and Lining is the most famous brand in the badminton markets with the quality, diverse and expensive products, or you can choose other brands like Victor, Apacs, Proace...these are affordable price brands, but also the products have good quality for beginners. With badminton racquets, there are three different styles of racquet attack, defend and balance, depending on which style do you play the racquet you buy. Furthermore, if you are going to use a wooden court or a synthetic court, you most definitely need to buy badminton shoes, because these shoes have satisfactory soles for running and avoid injury.  
  
Next, being a professional, we need to understand the rules and how we play them. Badminton can be played in pairs or singles. The rules of badminton are also very simple, we just need to hit the shuttlecock through the opponent's court and they will try their best to hit back, and if we hit the shuttlecock goes out of the court, the opponent will get the point. Moreover, in badminton rules, when we play in pairs or single, the service must go diagonal way and across the short service line. After understanding all the rules and how to play them, we are now the junior badminton academic and ready to training.  
  
In Addition, we have to work hard. We can not be good at anything if we do not spend much time practicing. . Badminton requires a lot of stamina, so the players must keep themself physically and arrange a good training schedule. Also, practice the basic skills first, do not try to work on the hand skills at the beginning. Remember to tame your skills and training every day because practice makes perfect and this is the easy way to get to the goal.  
  
Last but not least, the thing that makes a professional athlete is sportsmanship. For example, fairness, respect for one's opponent, and graciousness in winning or losing... will make us be a good person in sport or even in daily life.  
  
In conclusion, being a professional badminton player is a long-term challenge. After we surpass all the processes that we have come through, I guarantee that not only do you learn about how to be a pro player in badminton but also learn how to be patient, hardworking, joyful, and sportsmanship spirit.  
  
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