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ted  
  
**Shape-shifting tech will change work as we know it**  
  
After I heard TED with the title "Shape-shifting tech will change work as we know it" by Fabian Hammert, I get several main points. First,designers have become very adept at creating interfaces that to manipulate parameters while we are attending to other things, such as taking a photograph.Computer has fundamentally changed the way that we think about tools because computation is dynamic.  
  
Second traditionally, urban planners and architects build physical models of cities and people created inform to allow urban planners to design and view entire cities. As a result, now we can walk around it, but it is dynamic and physical and we can also interact directly. Or we can look at different views, such as population or traffic information, but it is made by physical.  
  
The last, dynamic shape displays can really change the ways that we remotely collaborate with people, when we are working together in person, we not only looking at their face but we also gesturing and manipulating objects. As a consequence, it is really hard to do when we are using tools like Skype because with using inform, we can reach out from the screen and manipulate things at a distance. So we used the pins of the displays to represent people's hands. In addition, we also can manipulate and collaborate on 3D data sets as well. Therefore, we can gesture around them as well as manipulate them. Besides, that allows people to collaborate on these new types of 3D information in a richer way than might be possible with traditional tools.
You may think that to keep your tomatoes look fresh with good taste, is putting it into the fridge. It is totally wrong. Based on a study form Proceeding of National Academy of Sciences, confirmed that many tomatoes have already lost its flavor before someone serve it yet to the kitchen, because of low temperature on the fridge.The low temperature storage is well-known as a special place to keep something chill, also it is used to make fruits or vegetables slow ripening and reduce decay. However, it actually can caused loss of their flavor and more blandly, if the temperature is below 54 degrees Farhenheit.  
  
The other researchers from Cornell University, the University of Florida, and Zhejiang University in China, gave other conclusion by putting tomatoes in less refrigeration time. It will led them to cause less depletion of important compound. Although, it only had little effect on their flavor. Furthermore, if you want to get your fresh tomatoes, then they suggested that you may grow it up by yourself.  
  
Source : New Scientist
*Hi Miss Septidara.  
  
I have read your summary closely. Actually, you presented the informative summary well. There were some information essential to be done. I could understand easily what you wanna to explain. However, you need a little improvement to make this as the excellent summary. You are supposed to introduce where you took this article. You can mention the original title and who wrote that. Perhaps, it can help readers to find reference relevant about what they do. Turning to your flow, this is good, but I really believe you can create the better flow if you can pick up the linking words appropriately. Fortunately, I did not pause when I read this summary because you used the simple words to build your paragraph step by step. One of the interesting factors in your summary is that you can give a suggestion for the readers so that the summary seemed clearly this is so useful. In the next term, you should reread your summary to check the grammar or coherence and cohesion.  
  
Although, it only had little effect on their flavor  
Remember that use of ALTHOUGH follow the pattern S V Although S V --- or ---- Although SV, SV  
  
Overall, you have worked this well.  
Keep Writing.  
GOOD LUCK*
**According to a newly discovered patent filing, it appears that Samsung is developing a completely round smartwatch of its own**  
  
Samsung as a market leader for mobile phone these days did not release smart watch at the Mobile World Congress 2015 while Samsung S6 and Samsung S6 Edge were launched. LG and Motorola are the competitor for smartwatch that had marketed to public earlier. On the other hand, Young-hee Lee, the Executive Vice President of the Samsung Mobile Marketing, stated that the reason to hold smartwatch was to break the status quo. Samsung want to use new idea for launching new products. Actually the design is ready and they still wait for the exact time, owing to the fact that Apple will introduce new product in the next month. Moreover, Samsung have a plan to launch Gear S and Orbis at the same period nevertheless, the rumour Pebble smartwatch will be released before Samsung smartwatch. Afterwards, the design of new smartwatch is not only for ordinary watch, it can be as necklace, keychain, and armband which is luxury still the main target for the customers.  
  
technewstoday
Hello,  
  
... the same period nevertheless , (nevertheless is usually used in the initial of sentence, not in the middle. You can use 'but' or add fullstop then start to the new sentence) the rumour  
  
Afterwards, the design of new smartwatch is not only for ordinary watch, ~~it can be~~ (not only.... but also. So you should use 'but also') as necklace, keychain, and armband which ~~is~~ (**ARE**《refers to neklace,etc, right? ) luxury still the main ...  
  
Gluck^^~
**Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value the quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.**  
  
These days, clothes formally becomes trend in most of company and institution. People who works have accustomed to wear a formal clothes. Even, numerous company and institution have rules for their workers to wear formal clothes.  
  
As we know, when we work should be polite and wear a good clothes. It can make our appearance looking good and be able to known easily. We can envisage, if we work in restaurant or government institution but wear informal clothes, it make customers probably don't recognized us. Therefore, I think wear formal clothes is very important. Beside, if you work in agricultural company or equal like that you probably can wear informal clothes.  
  
However, in my view that style of clothes is not effect against result of work. It can be happen because numerous big company in the world do not have rules to their employees to wear formal dress. They can wear anything but it must be polite. Particularly, the company which earns revenue from technology such as google. Their employees are allowed to wear informal clothes, because main point of company is make their employees more creative. Google is one of the biggest company which prove to everyone that style when work can not disrupt the revenue, even can increase quality.  
  
In conclusion, clothes which were someone to work do not determine quality of work, but affect to company if they work in public service. Nevertheless, if they work in company especially in agriculture or technology, they can wear informal clothes, because they do not related directly to customers and bother their quality of work.
Hello! I will give you some VALUABLE COMMENTS in your AMAZING essay  
  
(1) ... becomes trend in most~~of~~ companyies and institutions .  
  
(2) People who work~~s~~ have accustomed ...  
  
(3) Even, numerous companyies and institutions have rules ...  
*There are some repetitive in your introduction --> 'wear formal clothes', 'companies and institutions'  
Where is your opinion?*  
  
(4) ...when we work**, we** should be polite**,** and wear a good clothes.  
  
(5) ... appearance look~~ing~~ good and be able ...  
  
(6) Besides , if you work in agricultural company or equal like that you probably can ...  
  
(6) ... of clothes is not ~~effect against~~**affect towards our** result of work.  
  
(7) It can be happened because numerous big companyies in the world do not ...  
  
(8) ... such as google. Their employees . Google is one of the biggest companyies which prove (...) even can increase **the** quality.  
  
(9) In conclusion, clothes which were someone to work do not determine quality of work, but affect to company if they work in public service.
Hello Alfin, l give my correction for you  
  
clothes formally ~~becomes~~become("clothes" are plural noun, so you must use plural ver too)  
  
People who ~~works~~work have accustomed ("people" are plural noun, so you must use "work")  
  
... be polite and wear ~~a~~ good clothes (not use article "a or an" before the plural noun "clothes")  
  
it ~~make~~makes customers (pronoun "it" in this sentence indicate singular, so you must use singular verb too)  
  
probably don't ~~recognized~~ us(remember that after "do or does", you must use V1)  
  
It can be ~~happen~~happened because (the passive voice is using the Verb participle or V3)  
  
because they do not be related directly  
  
thank you
These days, clothes formally ~~becomes~~become trend in most of ...  
People who ~~works~~work have accustomed to wear ...  
  
... and be able to ~~known~~know ( to==> should be followed by v1) easily. We can envisage~~,~~ if we work ...  
you should make this sentence clearer..  
if==> conjunction==> sentence+if+sentence==> without "comma"  
or ==> if +sentence+comma+sentence  
and "but" is conjunction ==> sentence+comma+but+sentence  
  
... or equal like that comma you probably can wear informal clothes.
A breakdown of information about the outcome of studies in level of happiness from marital status and unmarried people and the presence of juveniles affect to the happiness rate of spouses are shown in the bar charts. All in all, people in marital status have percentage are twice more the proportion of people unmarried while the presence of juveniles is unaffected to the rate of pleasure feeling for marriage spouse.  
  
All of age range which people in marital status have the percentage more than four-ten while the happiness percentage of unmarried people below of a third and only range 65 and over has percentage at 34 percent.  
  
However, the presence of juveniles is not affected to the happiness rate of spouse which their happiness rate more than 40 percent in all range of children although spouse with juveniles under 18 is the highest percentage of happiness rate rather than the other and they reach in almost a half.
Hello Dioba,  
We met again, this is my advice for you  
  
~~A breakdown of information about the outcome ...~~ >> **You can change with this sentence** (The graph illustrates stage of rate happiness people who decides married and unmarried, and stage of happy couple who has children below 18, above 18, and no children )  
  
**Please make sure your writing at least 150 words, there are many grammatical error in your sentence.  
and the last, you using repetitive words, you can paraphrase with other words with same meaning.**  
  
Thanks
hello dioo.. this is my suggestion for your writing. hopefully it can help you.  
1. you should attach your figure owing to the fact that other people do not know data that you mean.  
  
2***A** breakdown of information (...) happiness rate of spouses **~~are~~****is*** shown in the bar charts.  
"a breakdown" is singular, and it is should followed by singular verb too.  
  
3. ... status have percentage ~~are~~about twice more the proportion ...  
"have" here is "verb" i think, so you do not need to put verb again
**Some parents believe that private lessons outside school hours, where students work alone with a teacher, can help them do better at school. Other disagree. What is your opinion?**  
  
The effect of home-tutoring on student's performance at school have been a constant subject of lively debate in Vietnam in recent years. Attitudes towards this issue vary greatly. As far as I am concerned, there are a number of point that need to be taken in to consideration here.  
  
People in favor of the positive influence of studying with tutor justify their position with strong argument, one of which could be that studying with private teacher at home can help students recalling their old knowledge, therefore it will stay in their mind in a longer time to support further lessons. Another justification which should not be overlooked is that students can have more interactive communication with the teacher than in the school. A class in a Vietnamese school, for example, include about 40 students with just one teacher teaching in 45 minutes, this make the teacher can't spend much time with a student as a tutor could. With regard to the last argument, it is acknowledged that home-tutored students usually achieve higher result than their friend who just study with the teacher in school. This actually come out as a consequence of the interactive study method and knowledge being recalled that was mentioned above.  
  
Although the important role of home-tutoring in many aspects of modern life cannot be denied, many opponents put forward a number of argument on the other side of the issue. To begin with, it is commonly believed that having a tutor to teach the students will make them become lazier. It may be true that if students can have the answer for an academic problem easily from the tutor, they won't have much motivation to do the homework themselves any more. Apart from the above-mentioned point, it may be true to say that studying one by one at home may discourage student's attention on the lessons in class because he or she think that it is not important to re-study the knowledge that was taught at home. Finally, it is well-documented that home-tutoring may be meaningless while students can study at home by themselves, in some way, the need of a tutor may indicate that the student don't have the ability to self-educating.  
  
All in all, although there are a number of different viewpoint regarding such a topic of heated debate, to be the best of my knowledge, the idea that whether home-tutoring is good or bad will never prove to be convincing among an ever-growing host of opponents, myself included. It is important to understand that the negative aspects of such an option far outweigh any benefits involved.
Hi, here are my thoughts  
  
- in introductory paragraph, you have to paraphrase the prompt. in the next sentence, you should create a general statement. Just in general. You can discuss about Vietnam in the body paragraph as an example because examiner will look after your thesis statement at first.  
  
- Using the C1-C2 vocabulary can boost your score. you can look after it at cambridge book.  
- pay attention to subject-verb agreement  
  
... performance at school ~~have~~**has** been a constant subject  
  
there ~~are~~**is** a number of ~~point~~ points that need to be taken ~~in to~~**into** consideration here.  
  
this ~~make~~**makes** the teacher can't ...  
  
their friend who just ~~study~~**studies** with the teacher in school.  
  
~~the need~~**The requirement** of a tutor may indicate that the student ~~don't~~**do not** have the ability ...  
  
avoid to shorten words because this is a formal essay  
  
Keep writing!
Hi, there are several mistakes in your summary.  
  
1. you should put introductory sentence in your summary consist of paraphrase the question and gives the general statement. .  
2.The effect of home-tutoring (...) at school ~~have~~has been a constant subject ... ( plural/singular issue)  
3. this make the teacher ~~can't~~ cannot (academic purpose) spend much time  
4. ... to be taken in to consideration ~~here.~~  
5. ... not be overlooked is ~~that~~the students can have more interactive communications(singular/plural issue) with the teacher than in the school.  
  
Keep writing and break a leg!
Nanotechnology is coming up with tiny size molecule so that can create anything. It also brings big implication in many ways such a making robot with nano as the main material in the development. Even, it predicts will take over the world. Some scientists have to make sure regarding using this particle like doing test and labeling in order to the quality and security still preserve. This breakthrough technology contributes in transportation which consists of metal as unbreakable material so that it can improve the performance of conveyance. Afterward, people's life more economical than present because of the existence of nano technology the reason is can generate power instead of natural resource. The another benefit is cleaning ocean from oil more effective and also can contribute on ozone layer. Eventually, this product can be available in the next decades.
Nano technology is created by tiny molecul with rearanging atoms. Some scientists conduct experiment with chemical safety to create it in factories. By the time goes on, there are so many debate about it, but the most important term is how to use it in the right way. Moreover, there are several usage for this innovation such as field transportation, new generation of computer, generate power and wide application to help people activites. Moreover, the unique purpose is coming from nano robot, it can reduce the human work by rebuilding some construction and cleaning up environment from disaster.
... created by tiny ~~molecul~~molecule with ~~rearanging~~rearranging atoms.  
... to create it in the factories.  
..., there are so many ~~debate~~debates about it, but the most ...  
  
based on Cambridge dictionary, "debate" can be used as countable or uncountable. if you want to use it as countable noun you should put "s" in this word.  
  
... to help people ~~activites~~activities .
**Summarize article : Polar species spotted in the deep seas of the Mediterranean**  
  
The team of marine conservation agency Oceana Atlantic discovered a Lantern Shark in the deep seas of the eastern Mediterranean. They can describe its like the body has 20 centimetres long and glowing bright blue along its spine and belly. By this invention, they feel fascinated about it. Moreover, The leader named Aguilar gave their opinion that an area was natural. They think in the deep sea field was less in biodiversity that make small number of race from the predator. Surprisingly, they found another discovery, it was brightly coloured coralligenous gardens 80 meters down. By this activity, it will give benefit to determine the convenient environment for marine conservation places by the Lebanese authority.  
  
source : newscientist
hello andika.. this is my suggestion for you..  
  
... conservation agency ~~Oceana~~Ocean Atlantic discovered a ...  
They can describe ~~its~~it like the body ...  
By this invention, they feel fascinated about it.  
... named Aguilargave their opinion that an area was natural. They think in the deep sea field was less in biodiversity ...  
  
i think you should pay attention about your tense. previous sentence, i see that you use present, but in the next sentence, you use past. furthermore, you do not put about time frame. as a result, you should consequent about tense from first sentence to the last.
**Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value the quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.**  
  
Nowadays, certain companies argue that the workers should be use tidy dress while the other enterprise say that achievement of work target is the most important aspect for their employees because that affects to the development company. Personally, I have a tendency to say that quality of work is more important than employee's appearance although several sectors argue tidy and smart appearances are important elements.  
  
Tidy and smartly dress have an predominant role for several enterprise such as banking and office occupations because they are work in the area which their subject society see perfect appearance as an obligation before they serve the consumers. Taking an banking officer as an example, when they are during their occupations, they have to look likes always tidy with their company uniform before they serve the customers and their appearance support them to represent as a humble and good worker. While trend only effective for occupants in public area services which employees focus on physical appearance, there are several jobs do not need good appearance and the employees more focus on their performance.  
  
Engineer is one of the occupations which the worker focus on their duties, but most of them no pay attention about their physical appearance and they keen to finish their project before the deadline. Taking my personal experience as an example, since I accepted in oil and gas companies, the enterprise, they send me in the offshore platform which I work in dirty environment and I have to operate several devices. I should be focus on my duties and I have to solve difficult trouble in the system after I arrived in the platform.  
  
All in all, the occupants is one of the essential aspects for workers which they interaction with the public area while achievement and performance more important is needed in industrial worker such field engineer.
Hello Dioba,  
This is my advice for you, hope it can help you. feel free to correction me too.  
  
Nowadays, certain companies argue ...>> **Alter nowadays with These days (more academic), first you can add this sentence before**(These days, clothes formally becomes trend in most of company and institution )  
  
when you write please caution your ideas, you must follow instruction of question.  
and don't forget to write at least 250 words  
  
**All in all**, the occupants is one ... ?? All in all? **you can change with finally or however is better I think**
**Listening Summary : Nanotechnology**  
  
a breakthrough technology has been introduce by scientist. This technology is namely Nanotechnology. Nano means tiny, the material is produced by controlling and arranging atoms, forming a nanoparticle. This is impacting civilization in many ways. However, there are a lot of problem faced by scientist regarding nanotechnology such as people has a wrong idea about its capability and it has a contribution in global warming. Regardless the nanotechnology problems, this powerful technology can be used in numerous way. In transportation, nanotechnology can produce metal which is lighter than common metal. It also impact computer area where sugar-cube size supercomputer is produced with nanotechnology. For local scale, it can help to clean up the environment by removing oil and other contaminants from water, making cost energy more economical.
~~a~~ A breakthrough technology has been ~~introduce~~introduced by scientist.  
  
This ~~is impacting~~makes an enormous impact in c ivilization in many ways.  
  
However, there are a lot of ~~problem~~problems  
  
... about its capability ~~and it has~~ ,with having a contribution in global warming.  
  
It also ~~impact~~impacts on computer area where ...  
  
A heap of luck :)
The pictures illustrate about the type of devices which be operated as wind turbine and the location where it can be applicated in the environment. Overall, the wind turbine has the same design in many locations, such as in the sea, lower mainland, or high place, and also this device has the same natural resource, mainly wind source.  
  
The wind turbine consists of blades which made from fiberglass r wood, wind sensor that has function in measurement of speed and direction of wind resource, generator which will change the wind resource become electricity, the steel tower which will prop up this device, and the computer in the house will receive the data from sensor and adjust blades.  
  
This renewable energy device can be placed in three places, such as in the sea, in the citizen place which is called domestic turbine, and in the high hell. The wind turbine which is placed in the sea has electric energy result between 100 kilowatts and 1.5 megawatts, but the domestic turbine can produce output electricity is 100 kilowatts and the turbine which is applicated in the high hill like mountain will generate 1.5 megawatts of electricity output.