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**With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.**  
  
Nowadays, dating online is a trend after the invention of sophisticated devices. Personally, I will not recommend my single friends to follow this way. Although the benefits of dating online are saving time, but this method tend to emerge an enormous number of fraud matters.  
  
First of all, the convenient of life since people are accustomed use cutting-edge gadgets make plenty number of websites which provide online dating. They believe that from this activity they are able to meet their mate. Moreover, they do not spend much time to acquaint about ourselves to each other. Taking Sandra Dewi that is an Indonesia artist as an example. First time, she dated her husband from facebook and they started to online dating. Then, their relationship became more serious until they married. She told to public that she felt comfort when had dating online because she did not need to meet often and she was able to have long distance relationship.  
  
However, online dating is risky. People are able to be victims of a large number of fraud problems. The users of dating online can manipulate the data about them and it culminates to crime. Based on the data of internet security agent in 2015, 78% of people ever experienced an offence from online dating and the highest rating was deception case. Therefore, I am going to give suggestion toward my single friend to never have a relationship from dating online.  
  
To sum up, I believe that online dating tend to be at risk thus I do not recommend this way to my single peers. Whereas people can gain time from this method, a huge number of deception problems is able to be found.
**With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.**  
  
Making relationship with a person by online is not impossible at present, improvement of technology realise it by dating sites. Some people believe that, the kind of dating is really suitable for single men and women. However, personally, I am not keen on permitting my close-friend get through this recent trend since I know the demerits are more than the merits. This essay will first discuss about how e-dating is able to find a mate for busy people and then talk how online dating becomes people way for making profit by fooling others.  
  
People with rush hour, sometimes have less leisure time, even for dating with other people. Web dating is their popular choice then, for getting a couple. A survey, held in New York, revealed that eight in ten business woman who single chose to get e-dating rather than get match with their relatives. Since by online dating, they are able to pick a man who fit with them, from the physical characteristic, quality until the occupation. Dating application provide a hundred or even a thousand men, only by one-click, they will get dating.  
  
However, it cannot be denied that enormous of cyber crimes are happen in virtual world, e-dating as well. Taking an experience from my friend, she is the leader of a start-up business but she is single. One day, she got online dating with a man that she had chosen by dating sites. She picked the man because she thought he was really matched with her type. Then, when they get got meeting, the man was a liar. Started from his occupation, address, even the photograph and the worst was what he wanted from my friend was taking my friend as insurances' member of his company. It was really cruel. Since that time, I prevent myself and my friend to get online dating. I guess in-person dating is better.  
  
To conclude, though online dating has merits for certain people, I do not recommend it since I believe that real life dating better than making a relationship only by a screen.
Hi let me give you some comments  
  
1. ... or even a thousand of men ...  
  
2. ... of cyber crimes are ~~happen~~happening in virtual world ...  
happen ----> verb  
you need to make it continuous tense  
  
3. ... Then, when they ~~get~~ got meeting ...  
  
4. I guess ~~in-person~~ in person dating is better ...  
You do not hyphen  
  
Thank you  
Keep writing
The charts illustrate about the percentage of happiness ratings based on the number of people age and the percentage of the effect of the children who the marital couple has on the spouse life. Overall, the connubial people have twice more happiness rating than unmarried people, and also the children who married people have that is not effect in the happiness ratings.  
  
Firstly, the percentage of happiness of married people is above 40 percent which the highest percentage at 45 percent in young age, between 18 and 29 years old, and also the lowest percentage in over medium, 50 to 64 years old. Secondly. The percentage of happiness of unmarried people is between 20 and 35 percent which the highest percentage at 34 percent in the old period, 65 years and over.  
  
Another graph shows the happiness of marital couple who have children that above 40 percent and it is not effect to their happiness. The highest percentage at 44 percent in married couple life which have children under 18 years old and the lowest percentage in the spouse life which have only children 18+ years old about 41 percent.
hellooo yuuriiiii  
  
yuri, i think that you should attach your figure owing to the fact that other people do not know about data that you mean  
  
The charts illustrate ...  
you mention percentage twice. i think you do not need to do it.  
... the percentage of happiness ratings based ~~on the number of people~~the age and the ~~percentage of the~~ effect ~~of the~~for children who the marital ...  
  
... at 45 percent in young age, ~~between 18 and 29 years old~~ [in ielts writing task 1, you do not to go detail) , and also (...) over medium, ~~50 to 64 years old~~ .
A breakdown of the Lakeside modification area during one decade started from 2000 to 2009 is illustrated in the maps. Overall, there are several features which experienced the change such as the appearance of the city, the form of entertain media, and the industrial district. While some features such as the industrial district become increase in 2009 but it reverses to the size of the lake.  
  
It can be seen that in 2000 era, there are the huge numbers of the residential regions that most of them spread around in the North West and the South area of the town, while in 2009 the located of the people residences only focused on the North West area of the city. Mostly, the city spaces have been built some offices, university, and several spots for entertaining the people which included modify of art center to the cinema also the building of the shopping area in 2009.  
  
Moreover, in 2009 there are some features saw more increase rather than in 2000. For instance, the industrial districts have been the most building by three-fold more than in 2000. While, the lake size is witnessed more decline in 2009 because of the new buildings on around of it. However, the present of car parking in 2009 have been replaced the derelict warehouse in 2000 were located in the North West of the city.  
  
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Hello Sarlinda!  
Allow me to give you some suggestions.  
  
Overall, there are several features which ...  
Remember the time signal, you have to use "past tense"  
change = verb  
changing = noun  
entertain = verb  
enterainment = noun  
You should type:  
Overall, there were several features which experienced a changing such as (...), the form of entertainment media, ...  
  
"While" use for contrasing something, you do not need to put "but".  
While some (...) district saw a gradual rise in 2009,~~but~~ it reversed to the size of the lake.  
  
For the rest, I just found you made some mistakes about grammar.  
Just for reminding you, the time signal is from 2000 to 2009, so you should use past tense.  
  
Hope it helps you :)
**With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.**\  
  
The immense evolution of technology makes everything possible to do, by solely touching fingers in our devices. As a consequence, these days, we are able to find online dating providers. This phenomenon actually great for reducing single inhabitant's population in the world, but I will utterly not recommend this to my unmarried friends, because beside I am still single, it also brings many demerits such as lack of the real sweetheart's selves and earn much sins from our God, albeit it still has disadvantages like less costly, even can make relationship with more than one person.  
  
In fact, online dating services have many users around the world, because they think it has many merits that can they got. First, it is inexpensive rather than having a real mate. For instance, they do not need to buy food, jewelries, or some presents, although sometimes they do it. Moreover, without directly meeting, their spending for fuel is lower than people who do offline relationship. Second, some people say that they can have numerous boyfriends or girlfriends through the social media application. It is really possible because they just communicate via computer screen, and they can easily deceive to their mates.  
  
Contrasting with my previous explanation, the negative effects ultimately outweigh the benefit. The primary reason is because people are unable to know the real personality of their soulmates. For example, some users can fill the information in the website with fake data such as occupation, religion, and the others. Moreover, many fresh criminals are caused by the internet that were unprecedented before. Taken example of that, in my country an enormous number of girls are got sexual violence that is began with over interact in online communication. Another reason that conclusively notable is because dating can provoke our God for throwing people to the hell as their sins when they do it.  
  
All in all, I entirely disagree with online dating because it has many inadequate impact, even it is forbidden in my faith. So, for all who still single, they are proposed to immediately marry someone who becomes the true love until make them flying together to the paradise.
**TED (v) Julian Treasure How to speak so that people want to listen**  
  
The human voice is the instrument all of people play and express a vast amount of our feeling. Yet, some people have the experience that when they speak, people do not listen to them. There are several reasons why people disobey the speaker. Julian Treasure, as a TED speaker, gives a number of habits that we need to move away form. He called seven deadly sins of speaking. First, speaking ill of somebody who is not present, in other word we called gossip. The others are judging, negativity which makes someone hard to listen and understand, complaining about everything happen around of someone, making something seem worse than it real well-known as exaggeration and the last is the confusion of facts with opinions or we called as dogmatism. In addition, he also added several suggestions to make our speaking powerfully. He called HAIL, which every single alphabet represent a essential word. First, H represents honesty, being true in what we say being straight and clear. Secondly is authenticity, the meaning is just being our self. Integrity as the third, it means being our word. Finally, L for represents love, it means that wishing people well.
Hi. Here are my suggestions for you.  
  
The human voice is the instrument ...  
the human voice is the all of people's instrument to play and express a vast amount of.....  
  
in other wordS we called gossip.  
  
The others are judging, negativity which makes someone hard to listen and understand, complaining ...  
--> try not to make a shopping list for your summary.  
  
... alphabet represent aN essential word.  
  
I hope it can be useful for you.  
Goodluck and Keep Spirited
Recent year, drought is the crucial problem for some areas in this country like in Papua. Many reasons why it happen and deforestation is one of these reasons. In many perspective, reforestation and forest preservation are the best way to deal with this problem.  
  
First of all, Water is the most important of human needs, but many areas in this country just have little water providing. Deforestation is the main cause of this problem. Marchela, scientist from UGM that focus on plant in her research, say that about 46% trees in this country have been deforested and it makes that area becoming scarcity. Owing to the fact that water can flow easily with subsurface If trees still exist, root of these plant can persevere underground water.  
  
Perserving forest and reforestation are the best way to tackle this problem. Hutama, professor from Upsalla University, say that trees can keep water within subsurface, more tree that still live, more water that is provided. For example, in Borneo, two years ago, this area had a long drought. After there is action to plant trees simultaneously by massive man, right now this area has enough water to fulfil inhabitant needs. On the other hand, deforestation in this country is caused by illegal logging, so to deal with this problem, government should make rule and punishment about that.  
  
All in all, water scarcity is the crucial problem in this country. The main reason of this problem is deforestation and this is caused by many illegal logging. Making rule government about that is the best way to tackle this problem, besides reforestation is needed.
Pramudiana, in reference to your task achievement, the highest score you can garner is only a 4. That is because you failed to cover all of the valid points in the restated prompt so your explanation of the point of your essay was not really clearly presented to the reader. Parts of the essay are really unclear and not able to present any clear ideas.  
  
For cohesiveness and coherence, your score would most likely also be a 4. The flow of thought in your essay is confusing, the discussion does not follow a clear pattern and there is a lack of transition sentences at the end of paragraphs which could prepare the reader for the next portion of the discussion.  
  
In terms of lexical resource, you did your best to use complex vocabulary but failed to effectively use it in the essay. This is because your word choice was not always appropriate for the discussion you presented. The errors in your vocabulary more often than not left the reader irritated because he was left trying to figure out what you are trying to say. So again, this would be another 4 in the scoring range.  
  
The grammatical range and accuracy could not score higher than a 3 because the sentence structures and errors in grammar and punctuation leave the reader wondering as to the meaning of your sentences and paragraphs. So more often than not, the paragraphs end up not making any sense or make it difficult for the reader to understand what you are trying to say.  
  
Don't give up. As you become more familiar with the English language and you progress with your usage in the practice tests, you will find that you will have progressed and have improved your skills. Over time, you will gain a proficiency in the language that will help you to pass your test. We will make sure to help you do that.
Hi, pram!  
  
Many reasons why it ~~happen~~**happens** and deforestation is ...  
  
In many ~~perspective~~**perspectives**, reforestation and forest ...  
  
~~Perserving~~**preserving** forest and reforestation are ...  
  
more ~~tree~~**trees** that still live, more ...  
  
After ~~there is action~~ the action ~~to plant~~**of planting** trees simultaneously ...  
  
you have to pay attention to subject verb aggrement  
and avoid using there is... there are...  
  
Keep writing!!!
Hello Pram, I will give my correction for you  
  
it ~~happen~~happens(because the pronoun "it" indicate singular subject in this sentence, so you must use singular verb too)  
  
In many ~~perspective~~perspectives(after the quantifier "many", you must use plural noun)  
  
Marchela, scientist from UGM that focus on plant in her research, saysays that (because subject "Marchela" is singular, so use singular verb too)  
  
root of these ~~plant~~plants(because the word "thes" indicate plural noun, so you must use "plants")  
  
Hutama, professor from Upsalla University, ~~say~~says that (because subject "Hutama" is singular, so use singular verb too)  
  
the government (the word "Government" need article "the" in this sencente because only one noun/things)  
  
thank you
**What's the fastest way to alphabetize your bookshelf?**  
  
Most people have the same problem to arrange thousand of books alphabetically. Although it seems complicated and it takes a dozen days, there are several methods could be conducted. Firstly, we can start to swap the book based on the alphabet, it means that you locate the book which has "A" alphabet in the first sequence, it is called as bubble sort. Secondly, you randomly choose a book which is located in the middle of books as a partition, after that divide the books into two groups which are separated by the partition, move the books to the right if their alphabets come before the partition and move the rest of them after it. This method is the fastest way which is called as quicksort.  
  
Source: youtube
Hello Abraham!  
Allow me to give you some suggestions.  
  
You are able to say "Although it seems complicated and takes a dozen days,"  
  
Could -> Past  
Can -> Present  
You are able to say "there are several methods can be conducted."  
  
Secondly, you choose a book randomly which is located in the  
  
All in all, you have to concern in your punctuation also about the conjunction.  
  
Hope it helps you :)
In this modern era, sophisticated technology has turned this life into well-being which people can key in all of information from the internet like looking for mate in social network. In my perspective, online dating is the best site to find someone special for mature people who have the time to get married soon and it is not suggested for teenager who find love just to enjoyable, even though from online dating site like setipe.com, people cannot find out more about their future mates in as much as this site do not go detail for giving information.  
  
Admittedly , there are many old youths who have not time to take date, and they have been pushed by their parents to get married soon. Social network has provided couple instantly for them. Cristian Sugono, Indonesian actor who has online business to help people for finding love by his website named setipe.com, say that many benefits which have been gotten by this website not only for matchmaker, but also for clients. Cristian has earned much money from his site in as much as he has succeeded matching about 100 couple his clients. This sort of website always is equipped by about 100 valuable equations to everyone who want to join it, and this procedure has defined specific character of people. Consequently, it is not suggested for juveniles.  
  
On the other hand, online dating also bring about meanness that the site cannot fully illustrate family backgrounds. However, this information is the essential part to be known when people want to get married with their online partners.  
  
All in all, online dating website like setipe provides true love for mature people, even though from this website, people cannot know more about families backgrounds of their future mates.
Hello Pram, I will give my correction for you  
  
teenager who ~~find~~ finds love (because the teenager is singular subject, so you must use singular verb too)  
  
The Social network (in the early of sentence, you must use article "the")  
  
online dating also ~~bring~~brings(because "online dating" is singular noun, so you must use singular verb too)  
  
~~eventhough~~even though from this website (the right write of even though)  
  
thank you
**With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.**  
  
In modern era, an enormous invention for technology is come along. Advance feature message and several applications to create connection with others can be used for finding part of soul of someone. Personally, I will recommended for my peers if they exult with covet relationship and I am argue that there are benefit and drawback of online dating, such as people will not waste time to always meet with kindred spirit and there is unbelief touch for each of pair.  
  
To begin with, advance technology make people easily to build relation with other. Because now, there are an immense attributes in smartphone, such as Facebook, Instagram and snap chat that make people effortless to realize more activities others in a day, such as with video and photo. According to experience my close friend when I studied in my college, he always pushed away by his dream girl. After that he attempt to found out a new female by means of online chatting in Facebook. As a result, now they have pair and every day they always meet in the message of what sup and they yearning release at one time in six months.  
  
On the other hand, dating online give positive and negative effect. Brace are able to focus on massive activities in a day without the necessity to always together in a daytime. Thus, with online chatting, such as by line or what sup, they touch of the best pick having long partnership. However, it also has drawback, such as there is unhealthy relation due to distance and fiber communication. With reference to the latest Married Institution in Nottingham in 2010, 77 percent relationship is ended due to dispute of each pears because there is unbelief for each pair. As a consequence, a few of young people are having relation just by online communication.  
  
All in all, as far as I am concern, I believe that I able to give suggestion to my peers finding soul mate by online. Besides, I think that online dating can make relationship safely, but it also make unhealthy partnership.
Recently, a marine team who observe ocean life in Oceana was discover of an Atlantic lantern Shark which has long 20 centimetres and glowing bright blue along its spine and belly during their expedition and they are very surprising because they are discover an ocean environment is almost completely unexplored and invent several species which very exciting. To explore more information about where the species come from and why they living in there, the discoverers take several species as a sample and collection. One of marine experts says that no competitor in poor condition of biodiversity in the deep sea causes the rare fish still living in there while the other argue that the rare animals come as a new comer and they force local animals. That's why this team conducts a research to identify problems and find a proper solution to tackle the problem.