dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
**Prompt:** Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.  
  
**Response:**  
Every subject taught in school is selected by considering their importance on the later of the students. While some people believe that History is one of the most crucial subjects, others argue that Science and Technology related subjects are more important. In this essay, I will discuss both views and explain why I think both subjects are necessary.  
  
History prepares a student for real life by delivering practical knowledge. By looking at the past, one can gain a vast knowledge. It can be used to get away with a similar situation happening again in the future. Because the students will have the knowledge beforehand by studying history, they can stay prepared for an identical event. For instance, by looking at the Bangladesh-Pakistan war in 1971, it is observed that we have to be united to bring justice against immorality. If the same scenario comes again, we can use this acquired knowledge from history to get on the winner side. The more prepared a student for the battle in practical life, the more possibility of his victory.  
  
With the recent technological advancement, a nation can be developed by utilizing science and technology. The population of the world is growing and the need for making tasks faster is also increasing. This has lead to an ever expanding field of applications of science and technology. Because science can make life easier and tasks faster with new innovations, it has become a crucial subject to study in recent times. Crops, for instance, need to grow faster to meet the needs of growing population of the world. This can be done by engineering the genes of the cereals. The more efficient a nation is with its tasks, the more it can be developed.  
  
To conclude, every subject has their own impacts on a student's career. While history can prepare him for upcoming real life events, science and technology can increase his efficiancy in executing a certain task. I believe both of them are crucial to make a student successful.  
  
Please grade me in a IELTS Writing band score. Thanks.
The first sentence is an incomplete thought. It should not be presented in the paragraph for 2 reasons:  
- It does not relate to the original discussion foundation  
- It is a personal opinion of the writer that should be presented in the writer's opinion sentence.  
  
The topic sentence of the prompt restatement should always follow the content of the original presentation, without any alterations or additional information. This sentence will force score reductions in terms of restatement accuracy. However, the essay will have limited deductions since the writer presented a strong personal opinion + summarized reason presentation towards the end of the paragraph.  
  
The student has not proven the 2 public opinions to be true or false, or of equal importance based on public opinion. The reason for the public opinion must first be stated, followed by the writer's opinion of that viewpoint. Either he supports it or not. His opinion should be effectively merged into the public discussion paragraphs.  
  
By including a clear explanation of his personal opinion in the concluding paragraph, the writer will cause the essay to get a failing score due to the lack of proper reverse paraphrase in the concluding summary. The essay is open ended rather than concluded in this current format.  
  
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## Nowadays many people enjoy keeping pets at home.

  
***What are the causes of this? What effects can be seen as a result of this? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.***  
  
FOCUS ON CAUSE.  
Keeping pets at home is an issue that arouses greater and greater concern today. / Nowadays, many people tend to enjoy keeping pets at home and it become an issue that arouses greater and greater concern today. Having pets at home changes today's life positively. It can help people have a companion in life, change their thinking, and so on. Keeping pets at home is chosen for many reasons: safety, improved human health, and enhanced mood.  
  
Safety is the first thing that appears in many people's brains when they talk about keeping pets at home. Some kinds of animals have been recognized for their ability to support and protect humans like dogs, cats, birds, horses,...For example, a dog might attack a robber or thief who is sneaking into your home at night. TV has also published stories about cats that realize children are about to be in danger and promptly help them. Moreover, pets are also a burglar alarm. Many people keep dogs, gooses, and parrots at home to protect their property and alarm when something happened. Humans can easily hear their pets shout when strangers break into the house, warning when having a fire or someone are in danger.  
  
At the same time, pets also improve human health. Scientists have researched and realized that people who have pets in the house will find it easier to control their blood pressure than those who do not. The reason for it is having pets at home will reduce cardiovascular reactivity during stressful period. That means the heart rate and blood pressure will not be affected too much and can turn to normal quickly. Besides that, keeping pets at home is a source of exercise. Pets are uncomfortable when staying at home day by day so people have to pick them up and go outsides, which leads to humans also having companionship when they do exercise. Moreover, when people have pets, they have some games to play outsides with their pets too.  
  
The enhanced mood is the last effect that people pay attention to when they get pets. Because keeping pets at home has both reduced physiological and psychological stress. Keeping pets at home leads to humans having more time to do exercise and it is good for stress management and overall health. Besides that, nobody can angry with a cute puppy or a super-soft cat, some stupid activity of pets will make a day funny and something cute will make a day comfortable. People who have pets are told that pets are an antidote for loneliness, especially old-man. When having pets, people will not worry about not having someone beside them because pets will be there anytime and can companion with humans anywhere.  
  
In conclusion, keeping pets at home has many benefits for people, so it attracts more people daily. Having pets at home is not only good for people's health, and psychology but also good for connection and we can't admit that people are happier when having pets of their own.
The prompt restatement paragraph is faulty as the writer repeats himself over several sentences. It also shows that the writer can only write in memorized phrases as he reuses the phrase   
  
Keeping pets at home  
and its variation several times in the presentation. Each time the phrase is used, he merely repeats his first meaning, thus creating redundant presentations throughout the paragraph. He also uses the word "concern" incorrectly. The word usually carries a negative connotation referring to worry and distress. If the reference is positive then this is not the word that should be used. Good work on presenting the positive causes of keeping pets though. That was definitely on point and helped clarify the writer's opinion even though the prompt restatement was confusing for the reader.  
  
The writer has over-written the discussion points in the sense that he presents 3 reasoning paragraphs where only 2 discussion paragraphs are needed. So the writer will basically not meet the time limitation for the essay, which is 40 minutes. He has written so much, and failed to review the essay for errors that can lower his score. There problem points were left in the presentation, uncorrected. So the essay will not be leaning towards a passing score.  
  
He has punctuation errors that should have been corrected. He used a comma and ellipse successively in a sentence. 2 punctuation marks cannot be used simultaneously in a sentence, these must be separated by a phrase. One punctuation mark per idea. Ellipses are used to connote unspoken thought, which is not allowed in the Task 2 essay. This shows the lack of punctuation usage knowledge on the part of the writer and will reduce the score accordingly.
## prioritizing professional workers

  
  
It is believed to be contentious to dispute which profession should be deemed pre-eminence and paid more than others. Many people believe that professional workers, such as doctors or teachers, should obtain better revenues. This essay will discuss the aforementioned sentiment and devise the author's opinion.  
  
First, it is universally agreed that well-trained workers, such as doctors or educators, must spend a huge amount of time pursuing sought-after occupations. Therefore, it is understandable that they deserve a better salary to support their living. On the contrary, doctors are demanded to contribute their effort saving people, teachers are asked to burn the midnight oil. What do they receive in return? Few promotion opportunities, inconvenient workplaces and more important, substandard income which merely affords bare necessities. As a result, it is discouraging for young generations to adhere to these jobs unless they are truly passionate. Moreover, professional workers are societal indispensable labor force, with insufficient quantity might decelerate the improvement within the community.  
  
The second apparent observation is that in some Asian countries, especially Vietnam, entertainment industries tend to broaden spaciously with the increase in television series broadcasted daily. However, with such inappropriate content, several entertainment programs might not acquire much enthusiasm or support from the audience. People working for these enterprises, on the other hand, are usually well-compensated. For a firm ground, which most people believe, is that they must exchange substantial physical strength for high productivity such as higher views. It might sound contrary to me since doctors and teachers also put their health at risk to contribute to public health and education.  
  
As I noticed, professional workers should be highly paid for their great devotion. Although the role of entertainment is still vital, we must devise several methods to balance both sides and increase the income for well-trained individuals.
The writer has turned the essay into a vocabulary usage exercise that does not meet the discussion requirements at all. The writer was expected to present an opinion based on a measured response within the prompt restatement, he did not do that. He did not offer any sort of response that met the measurement requirements. The restatement itself does not really make much sense, nor carry much logic for an English reader because the presentation uses English words that do not suit the original presentation. The discussion paragraphs are faulty for the same reason.  
  
As such, this is nothing more than a vocabulary building exercise. It is not a task 2 essay that can receive a passing score due to incorrect response formatting, incorrect LR presentation, and confusing C+C formats. The final error comes in the form of confusing GRA presentations from the beginning to the end of the discussion essay.
## The bar chart report

  
  
**Prompt**: The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  
  
**Response**:  
The given bar chart illustrates the amount of electricity produced and consumed, in kWh units, in the top ten countries - China, the US, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea by the year 2014.  
  
A glance at the chart reveals that China was generating and using the maximum amount of electricity while Korea was doing the opposite. Production of electricity was higher than consumption in all of the nations except Germany.  
  
In terms of production, China was clearly ahead of all the other countries, producing 5398 billion kWh. As this number dropped slightly for the US, at 4099, it secured the second position for the US in the list. There was a dramatic reduction in the amount of generated electricity for Russia, Japan, and India which was 1057, 936, and 871 billion units respectively. While keeping similarity among them, the remaining countries produced electricity in the lowest quantity ranging from 485-618 billion units.  
  
Regarding the consumption of current, a similar characteristic is shown by all the countries. China and the US was at the first and second position respectively in this category too by using 5322 and 3866 billion units of current. Meanwhile, the usage of electric goods were very low for other countries ranging from 449-1038 billion kWh. Despite generating different amounts of current in each nation, all of them were able to meet their needs except Germany which produced less energy in the form of electricity than it consumed.  
  
Can you please suggest me expected band for this task?  
  
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Avoid stating all the summarized information in one sentence. Such a format does not properly showcase your sentence structure ability. It is not considered simple, compound, nor complex in presentation. A sentence can only be properly structured when it contains one reference topic per sentence. This paragraph will greatly reduce the GRA and C + C scores. Once the clarity of thought is lost in the written paragraph, the reader will automatically be confused by the presentation. Avoiding that confusion is important as it is a major scoring consideration.  
  
There is no need to create a reference to how the writer viewed the image. Read the stock market reports as a reference. Describe the measured movements only. That is what the report is based on.  
  
in this category ~~too~~  
Since the countries are not first compared to others, there is no need to use an adverb here.
## gdp - three groups of nations comparison

  
  
TOPIC: The graph below shows the average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global apprach to business and countries that have not.  
  
MY ESSAY:  
The bar graph gives comparison among three groups of nations' average annual growth in GDP from 1960s to 1990s.  
  
It is apparent that there was an improvement in the number of gross domestic products of the developing countries through decades. Nevertheless, the non-globalisers lost their track during this period of time while the others did not. In terms of the developed ones, they seemed to be gradually economically slow.  
  
In the first decade, those with either world-wide or non-worldwide pursuits began with the lowest statistics of more than 1% and 2% respectively. Despite this fact, the global approach adopters soon kept pace and had its ratio reached its peak of one-twentith in the last years.As a result, the globalisers appeared to have a potential economic status. In contrast. the highest figure for the non-globalisers had been witnessed in 1970s right after their economic outputs fluctuated to the final percentage of 1,5%.  
  
The rich nations' data showed a downward trend over the years. Ever since the greatest decline of 2% in GDP in the 70s, the changes were unconsiderable, leading  
  
this group's economic development proportion as halved high as the first years. In addition, it can be seen that the developed countries were still able to maintain stable prosperity.  
  
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*The graph*
When you speak of the plural form of words such as "nations", there is no need to use an apostrophe as you only need tofollow the + S rule for plural word formation. This incorrect word presentation will affect the GRA score. As for the presentation format, a 4 paragraph report must be used in instances of 2 image comparisons. A single image needs only 3 paragraphs. The first paragraph contains the 3-5 sentence summary + trending statement. That format creates a more cohesive and coherent presentation.  
  
Never use vague references to the years involved. Always use the data as provided. The reader cannot?guess these information, Remember, he cannot see the image. Therefore the report must be factually accurate.  
  
Good job on reporting just the same. The analysis is understandable and easy to scan while reading.
**Traveling in a group is a preferable for some people. Others who do not share this idea want to have a trip alone.  
## How would you like to travel: alone or in a group?

  
*Present enough reasons and examples for your choice.***  
  
Traveling is now becoming facile due to the improvement in vehicles and cheaper expenses. A lot of people travel every single day, they do it with other people or by themselves. In my case, I favor going outside with my friends or my familiar ones.  
  
The first gain of traveling with relationships is turning their sentiment better. People can interact with others when they perform together. For instance, they can make a plan, choose a pertinent time, customize destinations that were opted for, and chill the tour. I had a memorable trip, it happened last year when the weather was turning to summer. I and my high school friends decided to make a trip to Da Nang, a city in Vietnam, we prepared a lot and brought several things, then we had a wonderful time eating meals, sharing our stories that we did't have time to do in normal days, and staying up overnight together to drink beer. Through this experience, we understood each other more, and perhaps we obtain more tours in the future.  
  
The second reason that helps me choose to travel in a group is the reduction of costs and the diminished risks. Booking a tour with other people can save lots of charges such as tour fees and service fees, moving fees, and purchase fees cause all fees are divided on each one, moreover, we maybe get a fortune discount from organizers. In addition, when we go with our companions we can refrain from unpredictable dangerous circumstances that we may meet in our itineraries. Providing that we go climbing or skiing then an accident occurs like falling down from the mountain or falling out of skiboard and no any rescue team can go straight to you. It is such a bad thing, however, luckily you have friends beside you, and they can save you right away. Many people were met numerous bad situations while traveling alone, and some of them died. Pitiful things can happen at any moment without previous alert and we can't realize them, therefore, we should go with companions.  
  
These opinions and experiences can't be found by personal travel. There is a variety of undeniable benefits if people make a trip alone, nevertheless, I strongly believe traveling with a team attains plenty of worthy things
going outside  
This is a word phrase error. Going outside means that one merely steps outside of the home. It does not carry the same meaning as travel or any of its synonyms. The writers opinion then becomes incorrect as it slightly deviates from the given topic and response consideration.  
  
familiar  
relationships  
Again with the LR problem. Look up the meaning of the words. There have been used as incorrect references in each sentence. The emerging problem trend at this point has a direct relationship with the writers lack of familiarity with various English words meanings.  
  
The writer has a tendency to use run-on sentences in the essay. These sentence structure errors tend to reduce the possible GRA score of the essay.  
  
While the writer understood the topic and offered interesting discussion paragraphs, his grammar errors cannot be ignored. These will greatly reduce his final score.
***Some people think that the death penalty is the only suitable punishment for some of the worse crimes, but others think it is wrong and should not be allowed.  
  
## Consider both sides and give your own opinion.

  
Write at least 250 words.***  
  
All over the world, capital punishment is carried out against convicted delinquents who have been found guilty of committing heinous crimes. On the one hand, opponents of capital punishment agree that it should be forbidden, whereas proponents can point to a number of equally arguments in favor of the death sentence.  
  
From the pro-life viewpoint, it is morally wrong for a government to execute its own citizens, and the death penalty is an ineffective deterrent. Indeed, there is inconclusive evidence to show that it deters people from committing horrific crimes. For example, in the USA pro-death penalty states do not have lower murder rates. In addition, pro-life lobbyists point to the fact that while poor people are over-represented in death penalty statistics, rich people often pay their way out of trouble with clever lawyers. Consequently, innocent poor people could be unjustly executed, whereas some culpable rich people might escape justice. Thus unless a legal system is flawless, capital punishment ought to be illegal.  
  
Despite the above arguments, advocates of capital punishment would argue that executing murderers and serial killers is justified. To begin with, if a criminal murders someone, then the victim's family ought to expect a punishment that is proportionate to the convicted killer's crime, which will help the bereaved family to find 'closure' and move on with their shattered lives. Moreover, it is unfair to expect taxpayers to pay for convicted murderers, rapists, and serial killers to live in prison for life. For instance, it costs the U.S. taxpayers approximately $100.000 a year to keep a lifer in a high-security prison. Finally, while D.N.A and forensics have made it less likely for innocent people to be convicted, some dangerous killers have escaped or been released from prison and killed successively.  
  
On balance, it is my opinion that if somebody has been proven beyond all reasonable doubt to have intentionally murdered another citizen, then the punishment should be equal to their crime. Therefore, in order for justice to be fair, I believe that the death penalty ought to be applied to the most evil of crimes.
The prompt restatement should not include a reference to the global scale of death penalty agreement as that is not indicated in the original prompt topic or reason. As that is the writers personal opinion, it should be presented elsewhere in the appropriate discussion paragraphs. It must also be pointed out that the lack of the writers clear opinion atthe end of this paragraph makes it incomplete since the paragraph is scored on the prompt restatement + writers opinion consideration. The lack of the latter means the scoring consideration will be incomplete for that section.  
  
This is a 5 paragraph essay. There needs to be 3 reasoning paragraphs + 1 conclusion. Without a proper concluding summary, the essay could automatically garner a failing score due to an incorrect discussion format. Never neglect to present a concluding summary or reverse paraphrase at the end. Avoid all reasons for scoring deductions that could lead to an auto-fail in the final score.  
  
The reasons and explanations are clear to the reader.The opposing arguments are well represented in a general manner to show the difference from the writer's personal opinion.something most writers of this prompt format often fail to do. Good job!
## Benefits of learning English

  
English is the most useful language that people should learn to get good at. Firstly, it is an important language because it helps to communicate with people from other countries easily. Secondly, it can improve your knowledge effectively because most important documents were written in English. We can read famous original books, and watch US-UK films without translation. Finally, if we are masters in English, we will get a good job, earn a lot of money and get more promotion