dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
***Topic:  
In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?***  
  
Many people claim that in the upcoming years, printed publications such as printed newspapers or physical books will be replaced by online reading materials which are available for everyone for free purchase. From my personal view, I firmly disagree with this conviction due to the significance of printed publications in our life, and not all online materials are free.  
  
First and foremost, personal reading preference opens up a world of possibilities, regardless of whether the reading materials are available online or offline. The disturbance of constant pop-up advertisements or message notifications is an annoying barricade of deep concentration when we read free articles on a modern device. Additionally, printed materials can be sought by collectors enthusiasts of paperback written their favorite authors to build their collections. Moreover, many people purchase printed publications because they enjoy reading and collecting physical books.  
  
Secondly, While it is the truth that online data can be accessed from anywhere in the globe and provide individuals with access to vast amounts of information that we search for every day, claiming that people can read everything online without purchasing is erroneous. I acknowledge that many websites operate with free access enabling visitors to read entire content and be profitable through advertisement contracts. However, famous online publications like The New York Times always have some policies regarding reading fees; particularly, providing subscription plans that give subscribers full access to premium features while non-subscribers can only read a restricted amount of articles. Similarly, most ebooks and other types of internet content are only available to purchase if they are lawfully distributed.  
  
In conclusion, although traditional forms of providing data are becoming obsolete due to their limited accessibility, it is flawed to claim that people can read everything free on the internet and reduce the purchase flow of printed publications. I admit that the exponential growth of technology brings a new era of reading preference with the appearance of ebooks and online newspapers but traditional reading materials are always important in our life.
Do not make claims that are not present in the original version so as not to negatively affect prompt restatement accuracy. There was never a reference to " many people". There is no point of view representation orginally so there should not heone in the retelling. It is also incorrect to say "free purchase" because a purchase connotes a financial sale of goods. There is no such thing as a free purchase. Do not confuse the please with the commonly used reference to "free with every purchase" indicating anon-sall related item or gift with purchase. That said, the paragraph contains a highly compliant opinion and reasoning foundation. Good job with that!  
  
The first reasoning paragraph does not use the correct linking word since the preceding topic is not related in reference to the second part of the paragraph. Rather than the word "additionally", a transition sentence to introduce a different but related discussion focus should have been used. know when to use a linking word or transition reference in the paragraph. These are the reasons why the second reasoning paragraph better develops its discussion points. It is the stronger of the 2 paragraph presentations.  
  
traditional forms of providing data  
This could refer to any reference beyond printed newspapers and books. It could also mean televised ?news, among others. Use a more specific synonym next time that clearly relates to the original keywords.  
  
The essay has equal good and bad points. It may result in q passing but not high score in an actual setting.
***Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.***  
  
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

  
  
It is true that students should study with their passion. Meanwhile, some people believe that learners should be taught what is necessary for their expertise. From my perspective, these two point of views are reasonable, however not comprehensive.  
  
On the one hand, students' interest has a crucial role in learning process. Students appealed in a particular area usualy are more curious and likely to find it is easier to acquire knowledge. Whilst learners who do not attracted by the subject seem to be harder to study. As a result, students ought to spend more time on the subject they prefered.  
  
On the other hand, B eing expertise in a sector may not enough for learners' study or career path. Other skills such as interpersonal skill, teamworking or knowledge in other fields are also needed. For instance, in the information and technology age , computer is an important tool in any work field so that people must be able to know some IT terminology and how to use it. In short, beside of learning what students like, knowing the basis of some relative subject is also matter.  
  
From my personal experience, there is an optimal solution that can integrate the benefits of these two opinions. Students should focus on their interest but also accumulate skills and knowledge from other states which is needful for them after university so that they can approach a better opportunity.  
  
In conclusion, there is no denying that all students should chose their major based on passion. However, they ought to study some of the general knowledge related to their primary interest.
The first sentence in this presentation is a prompt topic deviation but not an opinion misrepresentation. Placed in the current position, it serves as a score deduction due to an unsupported claim that is not part of the topic statement. It will serve as a scoring plus only when correctly merged with the personal opinion statement towards the end of the paragraph. Correct opinion reasoning placement is imperative in the opening paragraph. The problem, is that even the writer's opinion is not aligned with the claim either, making it a true negative score contributor.  
  
The writing does not use correct third person group pronouns to differentiate between the public and personal opinion The assumption becomes that these are all writer perspective opinions. This is indicative of an incorrect response format. It is no longer a comparative discussion based on public reasons vis a vis a personal viewpoint or understanding.
**Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.  
  
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.**  
  
*Whether specialized data should be widely available or not has become a topic of debate. It is argued that accessible knowledge in such branches like science, business and so on might result in copyright violation and unsafe practice; however, I am of the opinion that sharing knowledge of the world is beneficial for global development, as will be explained in the essay.  
  
To begin with, sharing the utter work of one's research might be unfavorable. If people could look up information at a push of a button without payment, it would be unfair for the researchers of that; since the work often requires enormous effort, time and money. Because the data is easily accessible, it could be taken for granted and the user might forget to give credit. Moreover, non controlling the spread of valuable information can lead to risky application both unawarely or with bad intention which may cause great consequences. A case can be taken as a good example is when people search for beauty methods online and inject filler and botox to their facial parts like lips, cheeks and chin at home.  
  
On the other hand, knowledge on science, trading and academia should be shared generously. It is undeniable that the aim of doing research and experiment is to share its achievement to the world so that everyone can recognise one's work and make use of it. Otherwise, it would be pointless if a research is carried out without the awareness and application of others. Furthermore, it is widely agreed that publishing data in such specialization impacts information receivers' living standard which is attributed to help them gain their knowledge and apply it into their work. If people read and take lessons from scientists, professionals or successful businessmen's knowledge, they probably would be capable of enhancing their aspects of life associated with that field.  
  
To conclude, while being able to access specialized documents without payment or restriction might lead to copyright issues and uncontrollable application, I strongly believe that it is beneficial for society to share the knowledge in order to give credit to the researchers and enhance life quality.*
The prompt paraphrase is not going to receive passing considerations for 3 reasons:  
  
1. The writer indicates a debate where none is present. What does exist are opposing opinions. That is how it should be referred to in the topic interpretation.  
  
2. He added a reference to copyright violation and unsafe practice. Data that is not originally referred to. Since there is no reason for such a mention in the paraphrasing, it will be considered a prompt alteration and result in a failing accuracy score.  
  
3.He neglected to present the reasoning basis for his opinion. His opinion statement lacks summarized validity.  
  
The reasons presented do not discuss the public opinion. It is a general discussion of his personal opinion of the 2 public views instead. When references to"some people" and "others" are provided The writer must use the correct 3rd person pronouns in the discussion to clearly separate his personal point of view as instructed by the prompt. This essay does not provide a passing score presentation based on the aforementioned reasons.
## schools curriculum dilemma

  
  
In this day and age, most optional subjects such as art, sport, and music are being removed as substitutes for Sciences. Numerous youngsters struggle with these unexpected changes. I strongly disagree with the statement above changes  
  
Firstly, art, sport, and music enhance one's potential. To be more specific, lots of students have a fancy for being well-known singers, artists, or even sports coaches  
  
They find these curricula useful for them and help them form the basis to develop to further extent In case there these wonderful lessons are deleted, however, children: are depressed, and disappointed due to having no interest in going to school. Therefore, they even fail to maintain excellent academic performances in other compulsory subjects, for instance, math, literature or physics, etc  
  
Furthermore, these subjects are healthy means of entertainment. Particularly, after having difficult and tiring lessons, the children tend to play sports  
during break time to boost their spirit and relieve stress. Girls can participate in the vocal room to sing cheerful songs with smooth melodies having to help them chill out after an industrious curriculum There are such friendly and harmless ways for relaxing. If drawing lessons, outdoor activities, and singing classes fall into disuse, as a result students may lose their motivation to keep learning. On the other hand, they are easily addicted to playing games and using gadgets excessively to relax.  
  
To put everything in a nutshell. It appears that many useful Subjects like art, sport, and music are being erased, leading to multiple consequences for children themselves. In my opinion, I reject it that schools continue this practice
It is important that the exam taker understand the importance of opinion clarity to the essay. Most specially in the first paragraph where the task accuracy score is based heavily on the method by which the writer makes his thoughts understood. His restatement is confusing and his opinion lacks a reference to the topic and reasoning subjects for the next paragraphs.  
  
Based on this exercise, it is clear that the writer does not have a working knowledge of how to format English sentences. His skills are so bad that he cannot even present a proper paragraph, nor use punctuation marks properly in the sentences. The use of certain words out of meaning adds to the failure of this presentation.  
  
Understand this, do not just keep writing for the sake of meeting the word count. Write to make yourself properly understood, using correct writing skills. Without which passing sectional scores cannot be given. Failure to do so means the essay will still get a failing score like in this case.
## IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - RECYCLING BOTTLES

  
  
The shown diagram depicts the procedure for reprocessing plastic bottles.  
  
Overall, the whole process consists of nine distinctive steps, starting with the action of putting used bottles to the recycle bin and ending with the production of reprocessed commodities.  
  
On closer inspection, initially, waste is collected by trucks and then transported to the recycling centre. Later on, gathered waste is sorted in order to select bottles which are still in sufficient conditions. Thereafter, bottles are compressed under tremendous pressure to form well-shaped blocks. In the next step, those blocks are broken into small chunks by crushing cogs.  
  
Moving on, after having been washed to ensure hygiene, those small pieces are grinded into particles. After the heating section, raw material is produced. In the final stage, commodities are made from mentioned material and then the procedure repeats.
This type of essay writing does not receive a passing score. That is because when less than 150 words are written, a word count percentage deduction is applied. This essay only represents 136 words so a hefty ple-scoring deduction will be applied. That will limit the sectional scoring considerations later on. The essay will be scored from a failed base score that will be difficult to overcome. Make sure to meet the minimum word count to avoid the auto fail score at the start.  
  
Do not make any reference to a seeable diagram. This task is based on your ability to recreate the given information . without linking it to the image. Failure to do so will result in additional deductions. The chance of this essay to pass will be further limited by this reference mistake.  
  
The trending statement is also faulty in the sense that itis a run-on presentation which resulted in sentence structure mistakes. We have not even gotten to the report paragraphs and yet, I can already tell that the essay will have too many starting problems to receive a passing mark.  
  
The reporting paragraphs are concise and with limited word usage errors. The problem is that the report became too brief. That is indicative of a report that has not thoroughly analyzed the image. The writer's perspective is highly limited leading to an underpresented procedural report.
## The line chart illustrates how many people visited 4 international museums between 1980 and 2015.

  
  
Overall, there was an increase in the number of visitors who visited the Louvre and the Vatican Museums, with the most dramatic rise seen in the figure for the second one. While the Shenzhen Museum seemed to be no change and the London Science Museum had suffered a big drop. In addition, Louvre was the museum which had the highest number of guests visited throughout the period.  
  
8 millions people were visiting the Louvre in 1980, with a subsequent increase to shy of 10 million in 2015. Similar changes can be seen in the figure for the Vatican Museum, which witnessed an upward trend. From 1980 with just around 5 million visitors, it had been twice as much as when it came to 2015 with the amount of 10 million people, nearly the same as the number of guests visiting Louvre in the same year.  
  
The amount of Shenzhen Museum's tourists started at approximately 4 million, after which it experienced a progressive decrease to around 3 million in 2000, before ending the period at 4 million again. Meanwhile, the figure for London Science Museum was at precisely 4 million in 1980 and stayed still to 5 years later it seen to have a downward trend and then ending the period at the number of 2 million visitors.  
  
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The summary overview is incomplete as it does not mention the value reference of the data as collated. The trending paragraph should be limited only to the high and low reference. This is not a paragraph that allows for a comparative analysis. The comparison should be integrated into the analytical report paragraphs. The summary should only highlight scannable information from the image. A quick representation will suffice. Do not overdo the trending reference as was done here.  
  
Avoid the use of archaic English words such as "Millions". Modern English grammar rules dictate that an S at the end of large and specific numbers is no longer needed when indicating the value. Therefore,  
  
8 million~~s~~  
  
is the correct reference for the values in this report. An S is only added when uncertain values are mentioned (e.g. millions of people, hundreds of dollars) as per analytical considerations. The early numerical reference is incorrect but the writer corrected the value title later on. He should have corrected the early reference to avoid LR and GRA deductions in relation to the specific word usage.
## IELTS Wirting Task2 Happiness

  
  
As a positive spiritual experience, happiness may be seen as an invaluable treasure in most people's hearts. In society, we can see all sorts of people are in pursuit of their happiness. Some people may argue that accompanies with family has the meaning of utmost happiness, while other may hold the firm belief that only the success in one's career means happiness. So, everybody has his/her own opinion about the definition of happiness. And that's why it is difficult to define happiness.  
  
In my opinion, no matter what definition of happiness you take, there are three relatively unchangeable factors critical to achieve happiness. The first and the most important factor is the clear knowledge or understanding about the happiness you want to achieve. Although it has a wide range from success in career, accompanies with family to anything you like, you ought to pick just one as your understanding of happiness. Two or more may distract your time and energy, leading your effort to come to nil. Further, the effort you devote in your pursuit of happiness is the second factor. If you are reluctant to devote your time, your energy, happiness is always in your dream and has no chance to be achieved. Someone may think the two factors above is enough, but it's essential to add contemplation and reflection as the third factor. Only by reflection can you obtain further understanding of the happiness you want to achieve and lose yourselves to enjoy the happiness you have got.  
  
Happiness is such a thing everyone yearn to obtain, but different people have different understanding of it. With clear understanding of three factors above, I hope happiness could be closer to you.
While the essay more than meets the required word count, the presentation format is incorrect. The IELTS Task 2 requirements are as follows:  
  
Paragraph 1: Prompt paraphrase + personal opinion based on a thesis statement  
  
Paragraphs 2-3: Explanatory paragraphs that establish the basis of the personal point of view statement. One topic per paragraph.  
  
Paragraph 4: A summarized version of the preceding topic, opinion, and supporting reasons.  
  
The writer has not met the response format requirements with this presentation. He should not have began his opinion explanation in the first paragraph. This portion should have established his discussion representation instead.  
  
The reasons need to number no more than 2. Each reason should be fully developed individually. This presentation is lacking in both analysis and development since attention to detail was overlooked.  
  
The concluding summary does not meet the 40 word requirement and does not properly recapitulate the previous topic and discussion points. It does not properly close the essay.  
  
While the essay is a bit acceptable, achieving a passing score may be difficult due to the lacking scoring expectations. The writer should use the correct format next time.
## social media, paying bills, emailing - purposes of using internet in Australia

  
  
The given bar charts compare the percentage of Australian home users for three types of purposes and illustrate these figures in six age groups between 2010 and 2011. Overall, the main purpose of using the internet in Australia evidence was sending mail which had the same popularity in every age group. Meanwhile, the proportion of users who had the main purpose for surfing social media decreased in the older age group.  
  
The largest proportion of users in Australia had the main purpose for mailing, at approximately 98% which ranked first over the period. Otherwise, the proportion of people using the internet for paying their fees or transferring money was slightly higher than for social media purpose, at about 62% and 60% respectively.  
  
The network was the most likely chosen for social media activities by people aged 15-24 years old, conversely, this type of users had the smallest percentage in banking or paying purpose, at 90% and 40% respectively. Meanwhile, using the internet for emailing were popular in all age group, at around 80%  
  
169 words  
  
May you give me my band score or range of score, please, thank you so much  
  
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The presentation has 4 images which means it should have followed the 4 reporting paragraph format. The lack of an additional paragraph affected the presentation score in the sense that a complete comparative analysis was not presented. This should have 200 words at the most, over 4 paragraphs.  
  
Bar chart identifiers for each image and the actual number of images should have been indicated in the opening summary sentence to deliver a fully accurate overview. The measurement type should have been included to help the reader understand how the data was collated and how it would be used in the report.  
  
The paragraphs do not meet the academic 3-5 sentence requirement. The writer must learn to write more clearly by properly formatting his sentence ideas.  
  
Based on this simple presentation, one can see the potential of this writer to pass this test. What he needs to focus on are content and sentence structure improvements.
## exam preparation tips

  
  
If you want to well prepare before sitting for an exam, you should follow these three steps. First, you should review all the old lessons. This step is vital as it helps you get the overall idea of what you have learned. Using charts or diagrams would do you good for remembering all the concepts, especially the scientific concepts. Doing some exercises is also a good idea for applying those concepts to solve real problems. Second, you should organize a study group. By doing this, you happen to figure out new things through your friends' questions while having more chances to review the old lessons. Third, you must take care of your health. You certainly do not want to get any common cold or other kinds of sickness in general. You have to make certain that your mental and physical health care on the best stage for the exam. In sum, you can confidently enter the exam if you follow those three steps.