dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world.***  
## What are the effects? And how can we solve this problem?

  
  
While some people may not have enough food to sustain themselves on a daily basis, a lot of food is wasted every day by people throughout the world. Effective remedies should, in my opinion, be put forth promptly to address the issues that contribute to this situation.  
  
First of all, there are many reasons that lead to food waste, but one of the main ones is people's living standards are increasing day by day, especially in rich, high-income countries like the USA, the UK, Australia, etc. By having a high standard and eating sorted food, the "unnecessary" parts they considered will be wasted at the dump, and you might or might not know, some of them are absolutely edible to eat, the problem is that that fruits are too ripe or just too green or they have weird shapes and don't meet the supermarket's requirement. Moreover, wasting food causes a lot of problems to the environment and the area nearby. For example, large scaled-operation has affected a lot of the biodiversity and habitat. Which is one of the main reasons for water pollution and the devastation of habitat. The fuels use to transport those products will be wasted as well, affect to the whole machinery chain of production.  
  
The problem at the moment is how to solve it? Well, there are actually some ways people are doing that will help to decrease it in the future. One is pretty simple, you eat what you buy and make sure not to spend too much on it and waste a lot. Secondly, you can donate our supermarket themselves can feed food waste to pigs, and farm animals to reuse it, don't waste such nutritious and healthy food at the dump. In addition, scientists came up with the idea of attaching trackers to food, especially in the supermarket. With this thermometer, it will help you to correspond to the right temperature to store the food at its best quality to eat.  
  
In conclusion, I think by applying these solutions, we can save food waste someday and it won't be our planet's burden anymore.
Never include a personal opinion when restating the topic. That act creates a topic focus change since it is not orginally included in the presentation. That will result in score deductions. Where direct questions are given, the author is expected to provide a response to each. These questions are used to establish a unique writer's opinion that can serve as a summary of the discussion to come. Neglect to provide these expectations and the paragraph will receive a failing score.  
  
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The reference cannot be used when writing an academic paper. The word does not help add to the quality of the writing.  
  
The writer is not thinking of the quality of the provided topics. There is a lack of proper explanation and clear sentence structures. The result is an essay composed of under developed discussion references which lower the C + C scores.
## The pie charts below show enrollment in different fields of study at a particular university in 2021.

  
  
The charts illustrate the percentage of males and females who applied for some majors of study at Clydesdale University in 2021.  
Overall, it is clear that both males and females enrolled in Engineering and Education, while Social Sciences and Humanities has an opposite trend.  
The proportion of applications which were sorted the most by males was Engineering, at 45%; while females only accounted for a fifth of the total fields. In terms of education, the figures for females were the highest and occupied 15% more than males.  
  
For the rest, females who registered in the field of Humanities were third as much as males, at 30% and 10% respectively. And Social sciences only 15% of women's registrations; while it made up a fourth of total men's enrollment.  
  
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*Pie chart*
While partial scores will be awarded for this essay overall, it will not be possible for it to meetpassing score requirements. There will be percentage points deducted due to the short count of 128 words. It did not meet the non-deductible minimum word count of 150 words.  
  
The summary overview needs to identify the type of charts provided and what the individual focus of each is. Note that the original explanation contained specific identifier clues that the writer should have used in the summary overview.  
  
Provide a clear 4 paragraph analysis and comparison report next time. The current presentation does not show that the writer took pains to meet the task 1 scoring requirements. Make sure the paragraph formatting is clear. I cannot tell if this is a 3 or 4 paragraph piece.  
  
2 images = 4 paragraphs  
1 image = 3 paragraphs
The word count is less than 150, and I think your essay should at least 150 to 180 words.  
  
You may structure your essay by :  
1. Explain the most interested major compared to the least one.  
2. The composition among men and women  
  
Try to elaborate and make sure that your sentences are linked or connected to the previous sentence.  
  
Overall you're doing good and you can be better. Best of luck!
1. The year is in the past so you need to put the grammar all in past tense ex. Overall, it is clear that --> Overall, it was clear that  
  
2. The 2nd paragraph is too short to meet the requirement, you will need at least 3 sentences to make it good enough  
3. The structures are too messy and quite hard to see, as 2 images/charts need to have 4 - 5 paragraphs  
4. Your word count is less than 150 words --> low scoring
## the proportion of jobs in manufacturing, sales and services field

  
  
The provided four pie charts gives information on the rates of job distribution in three different sectors in Town A and Town B in two years, 1960 and 2010.  
  
It can be seen that the percentage of people working in three illustrated fields were predicted to increase over the period. Additionally, Town A saw the greatest leap in the percentage of people working in the sales sector, which topped the chart to employ the most employees in the town, whereas sales-related jobs made up the highest proportion of the workforce in Town B.  
  
Looking at Town A with details, in 1960, 41% of the employees in Town A had a manufacturing job, while the statistics for sales and services were lower, 30% and 29% respectively. However, in 2010, the number of people having a services occupation experienced a dramatic upturn to 64%, surpassing the other two sectors, while the employment of sales and services saw a significant decline, at 16% and 20% respectively.  
  
Turning to Town B, manufacturing attracted the majority of residents at 70% in 1960 despite a remarkable drop to 53% in 2010. Works related to sales and services, by contrast, both saw rises in the proportion of workers to 22% and 25%, respectively.  
  
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The first paragraph is a run-on sentence. It is confusing for the reader to read as too much information is placed in one sentence. Basic sentence building abilities are immediately scored in the summary paragraph. Therefore, the paragraph must contain at least 3 sentences representing individual information regarding the images and other highlights.  
  
The understanding is that the report will help the writer create a mental image of the provided data. The report cannot ask the reader to look at or infer that the reader must refer to the image. The report must clearly explain the data imaginatively, based on the writer's analysis. There are several references to the image consultation here that will reduce the score in terms of meeting the task requirements.  
  
Town A is also more thoroughly analyzed than Town B. The analysis must be of equal length and discussion for both images otherwise a lower C + C score will be awarded. The reason being that one of the paragraphs is short in terms of analytical development and explanation.  
  
It must be pointed out that even though there are several score reduction reasons in the presentation, the writer still made a good effort in writing the report. He should get a better practice score in the future if he is guided properly during his review period.
1. "It can be seen that" shouldn't be stated in the 2nd paragraph, instead you could say " Overall, the proportion infer from 2 figures...."  
  
2. Since this is a bar chart consists years in the past, your grammar should be in all past tenses ex. remarkable drop to 53% in 2010 --> remarkable dropped to 53% in 2010.  
  
3. To be able to finish a paragraph and meet all the requirements, you need to have 3+ sentences, make sure to add more next time.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.  
  
## The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

  
***Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.***  
  
You should write at least 150 words.  
The given chart depicts how much attendance at movie theaters was in a particular European nation on several days in 2003, 2005 and 2007. At the first glance, withstanding various fluctuations, there was an ascending trend in the percentage of people attending theaters. Additonally, Saturday was the most preferred day, at which attracted the highest proportion of people, compared with others.  
  
Looking at the graph in more details, as far as Monday, Saturday and Sunday were concerned, they born resemblance in the tendency of proportion of attendance, with 10%, 40%, 30% in 2003; about 14%, 45%, nearly 34% in 2005; 12%, 42%, 32% in 2007 respectively.  
  
Turning to Tuesday and Thursday, starting at 20% and 23% in 2003 respectively, they experienced a steady decrease of 2% and 9% in 2007. However, in the end of the period, they scrambled again to 19%. Meanwhile, there was a significant drop in the amount of people going to cinemes on Wdenesday, going down from 16% in 2003 to 9% in 2007. In contrast, the ratio of attendance at theater on Friday remained unchanged, with 30% during the surveyed period.  
  
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Remember that a chart is a general image reference/ identifier. As such, the chart type must be identified for accuracy purposes. This is a minimal oversight on the part of the writer. The summary overview and trending statement are still strong in terms of presentation requirements. Word of advice though, try not to say "particular European nation" since that is not referenced in the image. It is enough and more accurate to say; "a European country" instead. A general reference in the original should get a general rewording in the summary.  
  
The second paragraph is a GRA violation being a run-on sentence. All paragraphs requires 3-5 sentences to receive a scoring consideration. Never compress the information in one sentence because it is confusing to understand when read.
*Looking at the graph in more details, as far as Monday, Saturday and Sunday were concerned, they born resemblance in the tendency of proportion of attendance, with 10%, 40%, 30% in 2003; about 14%, 45%, nearly 34% in 2005; 12%, 42%, 32% in 2007 respectively.*  
  
I think this part cannot be count as one fully paragraph since it is only one sentence.
## The picture shows the process of glass recycling.

  
  
Overall, the process comprises several stages, starting with the collection of used glass items, through different treatment steps, and ending with final products being delivered to the supermarkets or customers.  
  
At the beginning of the process, glass waste is collected at the collection points, after which it is transported by trucks to the factories to be recycled into usable products. Subsequently, the glass is cleaned using high pressurized water to remove all the dirty substances left to be ready for production. After being washed, it is classified into three different groups according to its color: brown, green, and clear.  
  
The process continues with the glass being melted in the high-temperature chamber until it becomes liquid form. Recycled liquid glass is then mixed with the new one, which is followed by the mixture being poured into a mold to get bottle shape of glass. Finally, the finished products are shipped to retailers and wholesalers for sale.  
  
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The summary overview is too curt. It needs to be at least 2 interesting sentences long. It does not have a hook that would make the reader interested in what is being reported. It would help if the image identifier were more proper. While this is a picture, it is such a basic tum of no significance to the examiner. It shows a limited vocabulary. Why call ita mere picture when it would be more interesting to refer to an illustrative diagram, a drawn flow chart, or even a directional image? All of these alternative references would have been more marked than just a picture.  
  
The reporting paragraphs are well developed and shows control over a writing style. However, the same cannot be said for the trending statement. That run-on part could have used several sentence presentations to help with information sharing clarity.
## learning languages and translation applications

  
  
Language translation software is becoming prevalent in modern world. Some people argue that it is more beneficial to use translation algorithm, while others hold skepticism about its benefits. This essay will look into both sides of the statement before my final conclusion is drawn.  
  
On the one hand, using language software derives numerous advantages, the most notable of which is the instant research. In other words, all translation tools today provide users with immediate answers, unlike learning the language on their own, which takes a whale of a time to accumulate knowledge. Therefore, they accelerate learners' studying process to a great extent. To illustrate, when travelling to another country, visitors may struggle in asking for directions due to lack of vocabulary. In this case, application application will become useful.  
  
On the other hand, I would argue that learning languages might be a noteworthy option for those seeking for job opportunities. Some high-paid occupations require applicants to be proficient in English, for example, not their ability to use translation algorithms. As a result, the more you fluent in the language, the higher job chances you will receive. Furthermore, depending on translation apps can also lead to a number of faults. Since these apps are just automatic and robot-based software, information can be mistaken in some circumstances. This will lead to faulty knowledge acquisition, which can not happen if learners spend time doing research while studying the languages themselves.  
  
In conclusion, both sides of this issue have indisputable aspects. Still, I am firmly convinced that it is better to learn languages due to its beneficial advantages that leaners cannot receive while using translation applications.
This essay may be written correctly in the eyes of the writer but, in the eyes of the examiner, the with has not properly formatted the essay. It is missing several key elements in it's presentation.  
  
The opinion statement cannot be given scoring consideration because the witter does not provide any actual direct opinion in relation to the given discussion. Where a clear and establishing opinion does not exist, no points can be given. Rather point deductions apply due to the lack of an establishing point of view platform.  
  
Being a written debate, the writer must present personal arguements that represent 2 aspects:  
  
1. An analysis of why the public supports an opinion and why he does not support this view.  
2. An explanation of a differing public opinion and why he supports it.  
  
In both instances public versus private reasoning comparisons must exist for the essay to be completely developed in terms of discussion considerations. This essay does not meet this requirement.  
  
Due to the undeveloped personal opinion in the last paragraph, the writer cannot be said to have closed the discussion. New discussion topics cannot be represented in the concluding summary. As the essay is s a properly formatted conclusion, it could very well receive an automatic failing score.
**Hello Reviewers, I want a LOR from my previous supervisor under whom I have done my one-year internship. As he was very busy these days, he asked me to prepare an initial draft and mail him a copy of this draft. Actually, I want a very formal & official tone in LOR and prepared some starting paragraphs. Please suggest me which is better and I know there are some corrections (in an overall sense, punctuations, etc., etc.), please correct them also. Consider this as a request from me.**  
  
## LoR on behalf of Supervisor

  
  
I am writing this reference at the request of Mr. XXX, who is applying for the YYY Program. I have known Mr. XXX for the past one and half year in my capacity as the Director at Technical Division of ZZZ Organisation. He has worked under my direct supervision as an Intern for one year and I therefore had ample opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic.  
  
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I am writing this reference at the request of Mr. XXX, who is applying for the YYY Program. I have known Mr. XXX for the past one and half year in my capacity as the Director at Technical Division of ZZZ Organisation. As Mr. XXX's sole direct supervisor during his one-year internship at ZZZ Organisation, I had ample opportunity to observe his motivation, personality and work ethic.
There is very little difference in the tone of both opening paragraphs. These are actually more like clones of one another. Both carry a formal tone and almost cut and paste wording. One may opt to use one or the other with no marked difference nor content or tone considerations. It is merely the opening statement anyway so one need not put too much effort into it The actual review paragraphs are what truly matters. The only information that should be added is the name of the referee.  
  
Sadly the editing work you are requesting for do not come with the free review. You have to contact me privately for professional editing services. My contact details are listed below.
## the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad

  
  
The diagram provides information about how many people contracted diarrhea in Mashhad throughout the period from 1983 to 1992. Overall, the number of people who suffer diarrhea in Mashhad had a tremendous fluctuation over nine years.  
  
Evidently, in the first two years of 1983 to 1984, the quality data of cases of diarrhea plateaued at 100 cases and rose slightly to reach about 110 cases in 1984. After that, there had a marked growth in 1986 when the number of cases was almost 65 cases higher than in the first two years. And then its doubled that of the first two years level out at 200 people in 1987. However, this upward trend dropped in 1988 to the same level as in 1983 and 1984. The year 1989 came with a dramatic increase peaking at just above 400 cases, but this was not to last as they dropped again. In 1990 and 1991, there had the same level of 350 cases and the number of cases plummeted dramatically in 1992.  
  
In conclusion, the number of cases at its highest in 1989 whereas the weakest figures could be observed in 1992.
The shortened presentation requires more work. It is extremely short and creates confusion for the reader. Image identification is incomplete and non-descriptive, leading to an unidentifiable reference point. Further information separation is needed in the paragraph to aid with information clarity. The writer must aim for proper information separation in the paragraph to create better TA and GRA scoring opportunities.  
  
The single image analysis is accompanied by a standard 3 paragraph presentation. This presentation does not follow the formatting requirements. The second paragraph should have separated analysis paragraphs. Related data should be grouped together in individual paragraphs.  
  
A task 1 essay does not require a conclusion since it does not require a concluding summary. That should not be a part of this report analysis. By the way a properly structured English sentence should never start with a conjunction. There is a sentence in this essay that starts with the conjunction "and".
## waste disposal in one european country

  
  
The chart illustrates the amount of waste that was disposed of in landfill, burning, the dumping at sea and how they changed between 2005 and 2008 in a particular European country.  
  
Overall, it can be seen that while landfill was the main reason for waste disposal and burning was the least. However, the trend slowly reversed over the 3 - year period.  
  
The number of poison from landfill started at exactly 1800 million tonnes in 2005, after which it saw a significant decline to precisely 1200 in 2006 and then continued to drop habitually to the north of 900 in 2007 and the final amount was 600 million tonnes in 2008. By contrast, the figure for burners or fuels rose indefectly from just under 500 million tonnes in 2005 to approximately 900 million tonnes after 3 years.  
  
For the level of dumping at sea, it increased slightly from 600 to 650 million tonnes in 2006 before dropping gently to around 550 million tonnes in 2008. This was the only one which remained unchanged through the time.  
  
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A clear summary presentation must be composed of individual information sentences. By definition, a sentence is composed of one idea presentation while a paragraph is the cumulative thought presentation of the individual sentences. That is why an academic paragraph is composed of 3-5 sentences each. Inability to present a paragraph in this specific form delivers the idea to the examiner that the writer does not know English writing rules and will result in a failing preliminary TA and GRA score. The writer must work on improving his sentence development skills.  
  
Additional confusion was created by the general image reference. It adds to the confusion of the leader who cannot create a mental picture of the given image since the exact image type is not identified. This added to the task inaccuracy and deductions.  
  
Overall, it can be seen that while landfill was the main reason for waste disposal and burning was the leas  
A reasoning sentence was provided but the actual topic or subject was not established. This is further proof on sentence structure unfamiliarity. The with must focus his future exercises on his sentence presentation exercises.
## the percentage of people in the different age group who went to the cinema

  
  
From 1984 to 2000, the line graph depicts the proportion of people in the UK who went to the movies once a month, divided into four age groups.  
  
While attendance at the movies climbed considerably in all four age groups, 15-to-24-year-olds were the most frequent moviegoers over the time period studied.  
  
In 1984, around 18 percent of people aged 15 to 24 went to the movies once a month, the highest percentage of all age groups. The 7-14 age group and the 25-35 age group come in second and third, with 10% and 4% of the vote, respectively. Meanwhile, nearly no one over the age of 35 went to the movies. Over the next 16 years, the rate of attendance for all age groups progressively increased.  
  
By 2000, the proportion of those aged 15 to 24 had increased thrice, reaching a peak of about 60%, more than double the proportions for those aged 7 to 14 and those aged 25 to 35. The cinema, on the other hand, drew roughly 15% of moviegoers aged 35 and up at the conclusion of the era.  
  
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