dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
## eating habits of people in vietnam

  
  
Vietnamese eating wonts are very important and people are often serious about how they enjoy their meals. Up to now, the eating habits of Vietnamese people also have some differences.  
  
Both past and present Vietnamese habits have a distinct community character. During the meal, each member has a separate bowl but all dishes are shared and served on the same tray. Vietnamese people often use chopsticks in meals. A pair of chopsticks is a miraculous eating tool that can replace many other tools such as forks, spoons, and knives,... because of its flexibility.  
  
A long time ago, in traditional meals, Vietnamese people had a custom called "eat-calling". It was just a short speech from children to other members which expressed their politeness and respect for the older in the family. Additionally, in standard traditional meals, people paid special attention to eating speed. If you eat too fast or too low, it will reflect whether you are good or bad.  
  
In modern days, eating is very comfortable and convenient, it is changed to suitable with the new age. Today, people are more open-minded, comfortable and positive in eating habits. They reject some rules to make members feel relax and sastify in the meals. Besides that, everyone is often busy and they don't have enough time to enjoy a standard meal. So, they eat something both delicious and quickly cooked like hamburgers, pizzas or packed food.  
  
In conclusion, eating habits nowadays have lots of changes. Traditional meals are formal and serious while modern meals are more comfortable.
It is incorrect to use 2 successive punctuation marks. One cannot use a comma and ellipses successively, or any other punctuation marks for that matter. Each punctuation mark used must be followed by a word or thought presentation before another punctuation mark of any sort can be used. The writer should also know when and when not to use punctuation marks. Improper punctuation usage affects the quality of writing and the clarity of the paragraph.  
  
The essay contains spelling mistakes, incorrect tense usage, and missing verbs. Attention must be paid and extra studies should be undertaken to improve the sentence development/presentation abilities of the writer.  
  
When the content of the essay is considered, one would have to admit that the topic is well explained despite the existing grammar errors. Further exercises should allow for improved sentence structure presentations.
*Topic:  
**Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds.***  
## Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

  
  
Answer:  
The majority of people consider that too much money has been used in conserving wild animals and birds, which also attract a great amount of attention from the public. I agree entirely with this statement as it is crucial for us to pay attention and budget to maintain the wildlife ecosystem.  
  
To begin with, it is such reasonable funding to protect wild animals since it greatly prevents the loss of biodiversity. Due to the fact that, there are plenty of mass extinctions throughout the development of humankind that are caused by human activities, such as the process of industrialization, urbanization and population growth. This problem is often neglected since to satisfy the demands of living standards, the authorities only focus on other urgent problems that bring them short-term profitably effects. Meanwhile, wild animals could be on verge of extinction, but very few actions have been done to respond to this issue. Having made more efforts to preserve these kinds of species as they play a key role in maintaining biodiversity. Being fully aware of protecting wild animals and birds might help us sustain our natural ecosystem.  
  
Furthermore, having given such a large amount of money can support authorities to raise awareness of protecting wild animals. In the past, overhunting and exotic animal trade tended to be common, leading to the loss of several exotic species. However, attributing this to the efforts of the public and government, this tendency has decreased significantly. Thanks to this, humankind has been given a wake to their general ignorance in the past. Having been aware of these serious detriments, the government has funded an enormous budget to contribute to preserve the wild animals.  
  
To sum up, it is acceptable that the government spends such mass funding to bring us sustainable biodiversity and also encourages us to have a full awareness in conserving wildlife.
Do not overemphasize the opinion presentation unless asked to do so in an extent essay. Always ensure that the writer's opinion is presented in the format as required by the discussion instruction. So, where "to what extent" is not specified, a simple dis/agreement with the opinion will be more than sufficient to establish the writer's opinion. The reasoning statement to support the writer's opinion is very good though. It truly establishes the discussion focus of the next paragraphs.  
  
The first reasoning paragraph deviated from the original discussion point for the most part. The discussion about the importance of biodiversity maintenance brought the discussion back on track though. Try not to discuss irrelevant subjects that unreasonably lengthen the presentation. Stay on point. Keep the examiner interested by focusing in relevant points throughout the discussion. This was successfully accomplished in the second reasoning paragraph.  
  
When writing the concluding summary, always use a reverse paraphrase. This is a presentation that should number at least 40 words over 2 sentence or more. The current conclusion does not meet this scoring requirement.
**Topic:**  
***Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it.  
Others think students should spend time on more important subjects.***  
## Discuss both views and give your opinion.

  
  
It is true that people believe students should know the science of food and the way to prepare it, while others hold the conflicting view that students should focus on vital subjects. In my opinion, food science and preparation are necessary knowledge students should be taught in schools.  
  
On the one hand, students study many subjects in school that is essential to academic knowledge and lifestyle. Firstly, it is impossible to put more subjects in students' timetable because there is a lot of crucial subjects which student must study every day. If students have to study lots of time, they can be under a lot of stress and be less energetic because of cutting off their spare time. Secondly, some difficult subjects required students to spend more time studying. For example, subjects in the aspect of Natural Science are complicated to study within a short period and they provide fundamental knowledge of engineering careers.  
  
On the other hand, I believe that science of food and diet should be considered as important as other subjects in school. First of all, knowledge of food science can help students build up their immune systems and remove fast food from their diet. Another reason is food preparation is one of the survival skills that must be armed by students. For instance, if students know cooking skills, they can easily prepare healthy homemade food by themselves rather than consuming junk food in each meal.  
  
In conclusion, although the school timetable is crowded, I agree with the opinion that students should spend time studying food science and preparation.
This is nota true or false discussion. There is no need to claim that one point of view is true, even as an opposing view exists. Suck unsupported claims will result in point deductions in the rephrasing score since it changes the original discussion basis. Never add information in this section. It negatively affects the score. The writer's opinion is as expected though so no deductions there.  
  
The exam taker has incorrect sentence presentations within the paragraphs. He shows unfamiliarity with the grammar rules related to singular v. plural word choices. GRA deductions will apply.  
  
The discussion is incomplete. The public point of view for the 2 presented ideas should precede the personal opinion. There should be 3 paragraphs present for the discussion. The overall score will be based on an underdeveloped presentation.
## When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration

  
  
In this era, money has inevitably been the most essential component. One's life depends on the ultimate job he/she is choosing and while choosing the job there are certain factors to look out for including: salary, interest, environment and passion. Yet, the abrupt inflation has ultimately engender the fondness of income rather than love for passion.  
  
To begin with, environment should be a top notch priority to every individual while choosing a job. As a matter of fact, surrounding truly influence one's personality, mindset, future and behavior. The ambiance of the workplace, the colleagues, and a good team is also notably significant because it is easy for an individual to work in a safe place. To illustrate, spending hours at a place which impacts your mindset negatively through unnecessary pressure directly results in pessimistic behavior eventually leading onto negative thoughts. Likewise, it invokes a sense of animosity amongst different aspect of life with all means and measures. Hence, running behind the income only is the most absurd act.  
  
Secondly, the dispute about choosing job revolves around either focusing on money or passion. Mostly people concurs that passion should be the salient consideration while choosing a job because it embraces the hidden talents and interests. Moreover, following passion will never make one regret about his/her decision since it might develop myriad of positive outcomes; for instance, it gives exposure to different situation, new innovative ideas are born, one can explore one's interest, the more you are into your passion the more efforts you would love to put in, which consequently will cause in optimistic results.  
  
As a matter of fact, today's generation venerates the amount of payment, yet all things considered the money is indeed necessary but not the most important thing. Personal satisfaction and convenience about the job is also important. To cite an example, if a person who is a doctor with a handsome salary but he is restricted to explore his skill will never be able to enjoy his job and work on his experience which will eventually engenders the dissatisfaction. Therefore, personal satisfaction is also necessary. Additionally, the career prospect and the company's name is also a notable feature. Working in the area consisting of no future advantage might be completely useless compared with working in a company which have a value in the future fields.  
  
To sum up, while considering a job one's passion, personal satisfaction and ambiance outweighs money because passion embraces an individual's talent and interest, personal satisfaction make a person more eager to work in an environment and last but not least ambiance makes one comfortable and enthusiastic to work with good colleagues.
This essay has several problems that will lead to a failing score. The first of which is the over discussion by 140 words. The task 2 essay should never be more than 300 words long. Long essays make too many writing errors noticeable in the presentation. Which is why moderate length essays work better. There is a lesser chance of too many heavy scoring deductions.  
  
Let us focus on the second reason this is a failing essay. The prompt restatement + writer's opinion paragraph. It is completely missing from the presentation. Yes,a topic was discussed in the presentation but, it is not on topic. Yes, an opinion was presented but it was not provided in the correct or expected discussion format. The with wasted his time and effort with this writing. It does not meet the needed scoring requirements.
## community should be based on the regulations

  
  
To this day, society is still in control of its order, so civilians do not allow to do everything they want. From my perspective, I totally agree with this statement.  
  
To begin with, what holds the most significant part is the government's authority to remain in our peaceful and protected life. The number of crimes would increase if there weren't any governance. For instant, according to New York Times, the robbery rates in Brazil decreased by 56 per cent after crime prevention was launched in 2000 by the politician.  
  
The improvement of the environment is also noteworthy in consideration due to the environmental rules. Obviously, when these stipulations were declared, people were likely to have enough awareness about our nature. Moreover, we find it easier to encourage civilians to go green. For example, as claimed by BBC News, the number of deforestation was reduced by 34 per cent in Russia in 1998 thanks to campaigns which prevented soil erosion.  
  
In conclusion, I strongly believe that our community should be based on the regulations which create limitations for individuals.
The prompt restatement totally messes the point. When the mention of "rule of law" was committed in the rewording, the writer created a totally different topic presentation. The lack of proper topic presentation has made the writer's . baseless, confusing, and weak.  
  
The writer cannot get a passing score because of the automatic failing grade the essay will receive. He severely underwrote the essay at only 180/250 words. Since word count deductions will apply overall, the preliminary score will be failing. The reason this happened is because of the rushed and little developed discussion paragraphs. He should have expanded on the discussion statements made rather than abruptly ending the paragraph, without additional explanations or justifications.He would have at least received partial scores for meeting the word requirement even if the discussion is irrelevant.
***Topic:  
## today, there are more men's than women's sports on TV. Why?

  
Should TV channels give equal time for women's and men's sports?***  
  
These days, most games played by male players draw more attention from the public on television channels than that of women. Chief of this is attributed to several reasons, and I believe that the television coverage of female sports should be provided as much as that of men's sporting events.  
  
There are some factors contributing to the phenomenon that the showtime of male sports dominates that of women's games. First, men's sports draw more attention of viewers than women's can, so TV broadcasters will earn large profits if they provide massive coverage of men's competitions. For instance, the matches of the Vietnam men's football team seem to receive the full attention of the public all the time, allowing TV channels to make off money from advertising and television rights. In addition, male athletes could perform with a higher degree of competence and extreme severity than their female counterparts. As a result, people are more likely to find men's sports enjoyable to watch. Take boxing as a typical example, this sport attracts a large number of viewers due to its aggressiveness and formidable fighters.  
  
However, I would argue that there should be the equal time of television coverage for both sides. Chief of this is because it could increase gender equality in society. This is predicated on the assumption that women could not be discriminated against if they received the great recognition from TV coverage as men. Consequently, the equality serves as a stimulus for more women to partcipate in sports and make brilliant success, which will help women to win more respect of the public. Furthermore, the more attention of television broadcasters on women would help them get more advertising contracts and sponsorship investments. For example, Anh Vien, an previously unknown female swimmer, has shot to fame and then made major deals with endorsers and brands thanks to her remarkable achievement at Asiad 20, which was viewed to many audiences through television.  
  
In conclusion, a huge profit and a better level of performance from men's matches are the reasons TV broadcasters do not give more attention to women's sports than men's, and I am of the opinion that the equal coverage of TV channels should be given to both men's and women's sports.
Good topic restatement. It shows a good English comprehension skill. I wish that this skill in English thinking was further displayed in his ability to directly respond to the given questions. He failed to establish his clear opinion as based upon his 2 personal insights. There was also a sentence formation error in his , statement as it was merged with the non-response idea presentation. This should have been a stand alone sentence presentation since it represents a different question response.  
  
The first reasoning paragraph lacks a proper comparative discussion. A profit margin or viewership comparison between the 2 gender sports viewership would have better supported the writer's assumptions. This should have been done because the writer referenced "female counterparts" in the paragraph.  
  
There is a tendency for the writer to over and under discussing his paragraphs. He must learn to complete his presentation paragraph in 5 sentences at the most.
## Whether changing is a good thing remains controversy.

  
***Some people claim that doing the same things is a way to keep a good habits, whearas some hold onto that changing trains our creativity. This following essay is going to dissect both aspects of this issue.***  
  
On the one hand, people keep doing the similar things through times because they love familiar situations and can't stand the changes. Phsychologically, they feel comfortable and easy dealing with situations which they seem to be sure that they are good at them. The dark side of this habit is, in some circumstances, it is passive to do the same things everyday. People have less ability to cope with sudden events.  
  
On the other hand, changing is one of the top tips to practice our mindset as well as improve the creativity and how we react to different conditions, educationally. In terms of finance, sometimes changing is a waste of budget. Let's take travelling as an stark example. While we normally drive our cars to work on the same street everyday, it's pricey to take a train one day just for the difference. However, we have new interesting experience which can even enhance our mood for the whole day.  
  
Generally speaking, in my point of view, whether changing is good or not depends on each personal favouritism. We can consider it as a healthy lifestyle as long as it's appropriate with our life and our characteristics.
The original prompt does not indicate any controversy surrounding the given topic. This is an unwarranted exageration that altered the perception of the topic. This will be a deduction for this paragraph. Food job in the actual restatements though. The way a premise was provided for each point of view to help highlight the reasoning paragraphs was a nice touch that will surely be rewarded, regardless of deductions.  
  
A problem arose in the discussion paragraphs though. The writer used the correct third person group pronouns in the first public discussion but did not do the same in the next one. He used first person pronouns too early in the presentation. This led to incorrect discussion formats in the next 2 paragraphs.  
  
The lack of a proper concluding summary has left this essay open-ended. Such an error in the presentation normally results in an immediate overall failing score.  
  
The with has a good approach to discussion writing. He just needs to correctly format it next time. This wasa good but non-passing effort.
## horizontal vs vertical city

  
  
It is argued that living in a horizontal city is the best option, but others tend to live in a vertical city. This essay discusses both sides of this argument and why I partially favor with the latter option.  
  
On the one hand, the option of living in a horizontal city is beneficial in some ways. Firstly, people can pay fewer fees for building services. For instance, people do not need to spend on security services or rent. It will save a huge amount of money each month. Secondly, living or working lower to the ground helps people be saved. In some situations, like a fire, people living in high buildings can not only be in danger when they breathe in carbon dioxide but also have difficulty running out of the building. In contrast, this can be solved by a horizontal city.  
  
On the other hand, I believe that living or working in a high-rise building is outweighed by its advantages. There are two reasons for my perspective. One of the most important causes is that a vertical city provides more space for people to use. The population is increasing steadily every year, especially in urban areas. Hence, people do not have enough places to live or work. High buildings are a good solution to this problem. Furthermore, people can be provided various services. Indeed, people and their private stuff, like transport or accommodation facilities, can be protected by the security of the building. People can feel safe when they get out of their place, facilitating the development of life quality.  
  
In conclusion, it seems evident that both living or working lower to the ground and in high buildings have their own unique advantages. Personally, however, i strongly believe that living in a vertical city is way better.
Give a clear reason why you support the latter opinion in your personal point of view statement. By adding your personal reason or supporting reason, an additional clarification sentence will be provided. This adds to the strength of the first paragraph and increases the kick-off score. Always provide atleast 3 clear sentences in this paragraph.  
  
Note that the discussion asks for 3 paragraph discussion propositions (Discuss both views + personal opinion) but the writer only provides 2 of these topics from a personal point of view rather than comparative public reasoning V. personal viewpoint. The reasoning provided is incomplete in focus. The essay lacks proper topic development. This will lead to a lower than passing score since the required discussion format is not properly presented to the examiner.
This is actually a paper about group social behavior rather than crowd behavior. The title of the paper maybe an incorrect reflection of the discussion. There is a possibility it will need to be replaced.  
  
More sectional discussions need to be developed. The first paragraph is too long. It also does not retain only a single discussion idea asa paragraph is expected to represent. The topics discussed need standalone sections to allow for a clearer explanation development.  
  
Transition sentences that should help with the cohesiveness of the presentation seem to be absent. The lack of which cause choppy and disconnected paragraphs. sentence presentation improvements are also warranted in several areas of the research. Proofreading for grammar requirements should also be accomplished to smoothen the research opinion presentation.