Kenzin, your prompt paraphrase and actual discussion of the essay is leaning on the wrong side. This means that your essay is not entirely in accordance with the prompt requirements as indicated in the original discussion. You need to make sure that you accurately address the original topic and instructions in the first paragraph so that you can get a high TA score and hopefully, the correct paraphrase will also help you discuss the body of paragraphs within the required parameters. The opening statement should be indicative as follows:  
  
*People have been known as creatures who do not really like it when events in their lives change. This resistance to normal changes normally causes certain problems for those who remain unable to cope with the evolution of their lives. This essay will discuss the types of problems that the human resistance to change causes and also offer a suggestion as to how these changes can be resolved.*  
  
You do not really offer a concrete example of how the changes in the life a person can occur. You turned this into a psychological profile discussion when what was required was an example of the problem and a possible solution. 2 highly simple topics to present. For example:  
  
*One of the changes that humans resist is related to the way they need to sometimes change the place where they live. Their fear of leaving the familiarity of a place and the friends that they have made causes them to fear the change in their residence. Hence their reluctance to leave their original home. Yet, circumstances force these changes to happen and they manage to adapt to the situation.*  
  
The paragraph above depicts a simple problem regarding the human reluctance to change and the reasons why they are sometimes resistant to the idea. The next paragraph offers a solution to the problem:  
  
*In an effort to resolve this sort of fear, a person needs to first understand the underlying causes of the change. For children, maybe their parents need to work in a new place. For adults, maybe they need to move to a new place in order to seek better opportunities. The point is, when a change is being made, a person must first understand what the reasons are for the change to take place. This helps him become less reluctant and more accepting of change.*  
  
For the conclusion, the more appropriate approach would have been:  
  
*While people will continue to be resistant to change due to certain reasons, this does not erase the fact that change is required in human lives. Though resistant to change, a person will always accept that it eventually has to happen. With enough thought and reasoning, the problem of resisting change can be overcome in a manner that makes a person accept change.*  
  
Learn to look at the smaller picture when writing these essays. You need to keep it interesting, related to the original topic, and also offer reasonable solutions that can easily be undertaken by individuals. You are not discussing world peace here, just man's resistance to change, one a localized level. Remember, one topic per paragraph should be discussed in order to help you better develop your reasoning and also, so you won't lose focus of the actual discussion.