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**Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.**  
  
## home tasks from school and their effects on children

  
  
People have different views about the effectiveness of homework in children's educational developments. While some may argue that this is a waste of time and ineffectiveness, I tend to believe that homework do more good than harm.  
  
There are a variety of reasons why some people argue against giving more home exercises to school pupils. Firstly, homework does not improve or enhance children's performance at school. Many institutions have seen no apparent changes as regard to educational outcomes. Taking Finland achievements in education as an example, it is true that this nation is applying no homework programme, the secret behind the success of Finland's school system, which makes them become the most prestigious choice of studying overseas. Secondly, school-time nowadays is extremely long-lasting, which sometimes lead to fatigue, poor performance and even bad behaviour at school. Finally, leisure time and hanging out with school peers is equally as beneficial for students' development as the time spending in classes.  
  
Despite of the arguments mentioned above, I would argue that a specific amount of homework is obviously essential. The main reason is that children can develop and progress entirely at their own pace while solving and handling with schoolwork given to them. This can also be beneficial in terms of applying important knowledge and skills taught in morning lessons. For example, maths definitely encourages school students to improve solving problem ability which can be employed later in the adult life. Having such vital skills on school leavers' CV can definitely impress many university admission officers or business employers.  
  
In conclusion, while there are some disadvantages of doing a large amount of exercises at home, it is my firm belief that children can benefit better and fully develop when solving these home tasks.  
  
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Darren, you misrepresented the discussion instructions in your essay response. If you review your original instructions, you were asked to  
  
Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.  
. The essay should therefore be in a compare and contrast, with a personal supporting opinion format. What you wrote instead is a single opinion defense with a personal opinion as supporting evidence essay. Those are two different essays and the one that you were, doesn't comply with the essay requirements. Based on this fault, you will be deemed by the examiner to not have understood the instructions which will lead to your task accuracy failure. Once you fail the task accuracy party due to faulty English comprehension skills, you will fall the overall test as all other elements for scoring can no longer be considered. Always look at the final discussion instruction, that provides the format for the presentation. If you are not sure of how to approach the essay, then ask clarifying questions while you still can. That is what the practice tests are for.
## number of smokers during 40 years of previous century

  
  
The line chart shows how many people smoked in Someland in the 1960-2000 period.  
Overall, beside some considerable fluctuations, there was a falling tendency in the figure for men smoking, while the trend of women was slightly upwards. However, there were always more male smoker than female one over the given period.  
  
The figure for women smoker increased significantly from 100 to roughly 200 in 1960 and 1965 accordingly and almost kept unchanged at this level until 1970. Over the same period, the number of men smoker decreased steadily by 50 people. It is noticeable that women's line reached the two highest point at roughly above 300 in 1975 and 1980, whereas that of men kept falling to approximately 450.  
  
From 1980 onwards, both of them fell dramatically. Specifically, the figure for female smoker decreased steadily, prior to a considerable fall by roughly 100 in 2000. Men's figure kept falling to the lowest point at 250 in the end of period.  
  
Help help me :) thanks a lot :)  
  
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@Huyhiep231 Normally, these summary essays ask the writer to make comparisons whenever possible. From what I can tell, there was plenty of room for comparison analysis in your essay based upon the line graph that was provided. While your essay is very good in terms of it's solid presentation, the year too year analysis where the figures were either the same, overlapping, or showing very little difference should have been presented as well. By approving the essay that way, you could have easily increased the word count and also presented a more comprehensive and important discussion of the provided image. Your opening statement was probably resonated when you posted the summary information paragraph which is why it looks a bit disconnected on the page. Make sure that your summary paragraph and concluding statements always had at least 3 sentences in it in order to represent a complete paragraph on the page. Remember, those 2 paragraphs represent some of the most important scoring elements of your essay.
**Science tell us some activities are good for our health and there are some unhealthy activities. But millions of people still do those unhealthy activities. Why? what can we do to change this situation?**  
  
## fighting bad habits

  
  
My answer:  
Today, the science development helps us know what action is good and what is bad for our health, but there are many people keep doing unhealthy activities. There are a number of reasons behind these activities and several solutions should be done to change this reality.  
  
There are two primary reasons why people still do bad things even have been warned that it is harmful for their health. Firstly, activities such as smoking, drinking, drug,... are hobby of many people. Ordinarily, if someone is addicted with cigarette, he could not give up it easily. In addition, many youngsters follow trends such as using Shisha, playing dangerous sports as Parkour, eating poor diets,...because they want to express themselves to others or keep pace with hot trends. Secondly, in many countries still exist outmoded traditions from a long time ago such as cure diseased by drinking ashes water or beating patient with a whip to drive ghost away. In many cases, people even believe in shamans rather than doctors.  
  
There are two solutions to solve these problems. On the one hand, parents need pay more attention to their children and advise them to stay away from their negative health habits. Meanwhile, government should promotes and raises public awareness of the damage of the harmful activities to health by some measures such as limit drug's advertising, fine people who smoke or play dangerous sports at public places,..... On the other hand, the state and health organizations need carry out campaigns to change the old view of healthy in some underdeveloped areas by support free medical services.  
  
In conclusion, there are several reasons behind that many people still do unhealthy activities, and this problem should be solved by both family and society.
Hy, you are writing an academic paper, not a creative writing class narrative essay. Therefore, you should not be using ellipses (...) in your writing as that is an artistic writing approach and has no place in academic writing. Always write in complete thoughts and paragraphs. Do not wax melancholic as these special characters tend to indicate in any writing form. Always speak to the examiner in a direct manner. Say what you mean, don't expect him to fill in the blanks because he doesn't have the time to be analytical of your writing.Over all, you wrote some pretty acceptable reasons and suggestions. It is just weakened by the presentation that you chose to use.  
  
With regards to your opening statement, aim to present at least 3 sentences so that you are sure that you were able to properly paraphrase the original instructions. Remember, the opening statement will be used to score your English comprehension skills. So be as detailed as possible in your interpretation of the prompt requirements. Just make sure you don't go over 5 sentences to complete the paragraph. Do the same for the concluding statement. It should summarize the full discussion essay that you just wrote so it can't be only a one liner at the end of the essay.
## the growth rates of China and India

  
  
The chart compares the number of people fluctutes indian and chinese since the year 2000 and predictes growth rates in the future.  
Overall, it is clear that the figures of India people increased sharply from 2010 to 2025 while that the number of China people was went down suddenly the same time.  
  
It can be seen that in 2000, the number of population figures for India at 1000 billions whereas Chinese higher than India approximately 250 billions of total table population. In 2010, Indian trends grew up dramatically until 2050 it will reach peak at 1,600 billions and catches with China at 2030.  
  
It is clear that Chinese has decreased sharply the same period. As can be seen from 2010 to 2025 china rise slightly up 1,350 billions to 1,400 however after that was decreased gradually.  
  
In conclusion, the growth rates of China and India were fluctuated suddenly. There has observed, there was sharp growth in the number of Indian people from 2010 to the future. In contrast, the number of china people was dropped significantly.  
  
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Trang, you need to work hard on improving your grammar structure, range, and accuracy. I understand that English is not your first language which is why you did not do a very good job in writing this essay. Your lexical resources are also faulty, there is no such word as fluctutes. What you mean to say is either "fluctuation" or "fluctuates". It is imperative that you do your best to expose yourself to English grammar in both the written and spoken form if you are to improve in these tremendously problematic areas of English writing. Your work is so bad on this essay that I am going to stop myself from scoring it because I do not want to make you feel like a failure. Instead, I will advice you to work hard on improving your grammar skills and make sure that you are at least a stable simple English language user in the written form before you even consider taking the IELTS test. Make sure that you develop your understanding of English word meanings and also, that you are able to spell these terms properly. Based upon your performance in this essay, you are nowhere near being prepared to take the test.
This Is The First Time I Write Ielts Task 1.  
  
## numbers of tv lookers watching sport

  
  
The table compares the information of millions of television viewers in sports by four different country. It's clear that tennis has the the most viewers on television. However, The total number of viewers of all sports in the USA is higher than any other country.  
  
In general tennis is the most popular sport on television in all four countries. There are nearly 26 million viewers and each country about 6 to 7 million people watch it. Golf is the second popular sport that has 22 million viewers but it's more popular in the USA with 11 million people to watch on TV.  
  
Not many people like watching motor racing on their television with other sports. It has only 1 to 1.5 million people watch motor racing in the USA and Canada but the number of viewers for motor racing is higher in the UK and Australia. Athletics has steady stream viewers with 3 to 5 million viewers in four countries.
Hi Tylen,  
First of all, I think you should include all of the listed countries name (in the data), so that your reader will know which countries you are talking about aside from USA (its optional, though I think its better that way, just try it ). Secondly, your first sentence in the 2nd paragraph better be placed in the first paragraph as an overview because it serves a generalized view, as in the body paragraph you supposed to discuss the specific features of the data already. Usually people build the first paragraph as an intro and overview, while in the following paragraph they focused on the detail of the data (specific). May be you should try to read some sample answers provided all over the internet in order to get to know more on how to answer and practice more on your paragraph and sentence structure. Oh, and may be next time you should attach the data as well so we know what data we are dealing with. Thanks and good luck.
It is difficult to understand your writing since you do not have any picture included. Please post the picture of the graph. Not only this, it is always good to attach the question from the rubric, so we are easily to check the way you paraphrase the question.  
  
Some points to consider when it comes to Writing Task 1:  
1. You need to write an overview to covers in the body paragraphs.  
2. Since this is Task 1, you are suggested to compare and contrast the figures. What I see from your writing above is lack of comparison and contrast sentences, in particular paragraph 2.  
  
3. Please control you grammatical ranges: four different country = COUNTRIES; Not many people like = Not do many people like (inverted sentence)  
  
hope this helps :)
**The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.  
  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.**  
  
## phone calling statistics in britain

  
  
The bar chart compares three different types of UK telephone calls over a period of 7 years, measured in billions of minutes.  
Overall, although the mobile calls were still the least popular in 2002, the gap between the three categories had extended considerably over the 7 - year period.  
  
In 1995, mobile calls has the lowest using by the UK people, nearly 2,5 million minutes. In contrast, local-fixed line calls and national and international calls has the percentage of minute of about 72 million and 37 million, respectively. The period between 1995 and 2002 witnessed a slight increase in the proportion of minutes of local-fixed line calls, reaching 90 million in 1999.  
  
The totals of national - international- fixed line calls relatively go up from 37 million minutes to 62 million minutes for local-fixed line fell sharply from their peak in 1999 to equalize with the figure of itself in 1995. However, the local - fixed line calls were the highest over the period shown.  
  
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Oanh, your essay lacks an overall sense of progression. The summary doesn't really provide the details of the day in a proper manner that would lend itself to the idea of a clear discussion outline. You should have properly indicated the years from the starting year first. The method of discussion is not cohesive and therefore, lacks a coherent presentation method. While you did present a year on year comparison, the discussion analysis of the comparison points shows that very little study and analysis was provided on your end to closely representing the information in your essay. While your essay responds to most of the prompt, you should try to use the analytical part to create more complex paragraphs that could translate to better score considerations for you. The analysis portion needs to be better developed because that is the best way to prove your English grammar, sentence development, and vocabulary skills.
**The chart below give information on the ages of populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.**  
  
## age groups numbers in two different countries

  
  
The pie charts compare populations between Yemen and Italy by three categories of age groups in 2000 and prediction for 2050.  
  
It is noticeable that the 15-59 years accounts for the largest proportion in 2000 and in 2050 of both countries. Another interesting point is that the proportion of 0-14 years decreases slightly over the period of 50 years while the percentage of 60+ years tends to increase.  
  
In 2000, the proportion for 0-14 years in Yemen and Italy was 50.1% and 14.3% respectively, which was the largest part of Yemen's chart and the smallest of Italy's chart. Additionally, if just 3.6% of Yemen people are 60+ years in 2000, it is predicted to rise slightly to 5.7% after 50 years. This trend is also applied with Italy as there was just 24.1% people are 60+ years in 2000, the percentage is forecasted to be on the rise in 2050, about 42.3 %.  
  
On the contrary, in 2000, people who were between 0 and 14 years of Yemen and Italy accounted for 50.1% and 14.3 % correspondingly. In 2050, this age group percentage of both countries will see a slight drop, with 37% for Yemen and 11.5% for Italy.  
  
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Khoa, the summary overview is only considered a complete paragraph when it indicates all of the forthcoming discussion information in an essay based upon the images provided to you. Your presentation lacks a mention of the age groups involved as well as the instructions indicating that you will be making comparisons when necessary. Your second paragraph requires additional information presentation, possibly in the comparison range because it doesn't meet the minimum sentence requirement to qualify as a paragraph. The same observation was seen in your last paragraph. Your score will be reduced because of the incomplete presentation in those paragraphs. Your essay would have also been made stronger if you had dedicated a paragraph to cross referencing the information about Yemen and Italy. Such cross referencing indications increase your score because your analytical abilities in English are highlighted and catches the attention of the examiner.
## inequality at work

  
  
In our modern era, women have attained many achievements on a par with that of men, which is a positive sign of the disappearance of sexual discrimination. Female, nevertheless, still be treated unfair in salary and promotion prospects at work.  
  
It is controversial that this issue is unlikely to be solved as sexual inequality has lasted since ancient time and been regarded as a portion of tradition. But, from my perspective, if people work together and change our comprehension, we can figure out this matter.  
  
One possible solution is that government should pass a law on women rights. The law has to point out that male and female must be paid the same and have equal promotion prospects in every career. Besides, the law must contain maternity leave so female will have sufficient time for either their children or work. Particularly, the law has to be obeyed by every individual, company and organization.  
  
Another practical approach for the government is to set a bright example and take the lead by recruiting the same number of male and female staff and making sure that female staffs have equal promotion opportunities and salary in comparison with that of male. In addition,government should organize events to praise female's devotion in the workplaces.  
  
To conclude, I want to confirm that sexual inequality at work is a difficult issue, however, if we work together, this problem will be solved. It is high time the government passed a law on women rights and taken the lead against sexual inequality in the workplaces.
Riley, the discussion that you have presented shows a lack of current knowledge regarding the treatment of women in the workplace. These solutions that you are proposing have already been implemented on a world wide scale, unless these laws have not been enacted in your country? In which case, the essay would have become stronger and made more sense if you indicated that you are discussing the issue as it relates to the inequality of women's treatment in your country. Your English sentence composition needs work. You need to work on your knowledge of word plurality (female should be females). Your conclusion is also flawed as it does not properly sum up the essay prompt and previous facts in relation to your opinion.  
  
By the way, I am assuming that this is the way that this essay is to be written. Without the original prompt posted, I can't accurately say that you have properly developed your essay discussion and represented the instructions in a relevant manner. Please remember to post the prompt along with your essay when you post your next essay on the forum.
**As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?**  
  
## companies responsibilities toward citizens

  
  
People have different views about what kinds of obligation a company should have. While I agree that the top priority of companies is to generate profits, I believe that they should also take responsibilities for society.  
  
On the one hand, for most the company, making money is the precursor in an attempt to survive in a competitive world. Firstly, any companies have to cover its running cost such as employee's salary packages and payments for buildings and utilities. If a company is unable to pay its bills or meet the changing needs of customers, it would face the possibility of the verge of collapse. Secondly, when enterprises earn much money they can broaden their businesses, which opens avenues to seek more employment opportunities for people securing a job. To exemplify, some international corporations and firms such as Apple or Microsoft has been employing hundreds of thousands individuals around the world, which catalyzes to reduce unemployment rates and bolster economy growth in many countries.  
  
On the other hand, there are several reasons why businesses should also accept that they have social responsibilities. The first one is that serious environmental damage is mainly attributed to the rising number of facilities. Therefore, they need to take immediately actions to protect the natural environment. Indeed, they could try new technologies to recycle their wastes instead of disposing them immediately. Another reason is that businesses could use a proportion of their profits to support local charities, especially needy people and those who are less fortunate such as homeless and disabled citizens. It promotes a sense of humanity and leads to the fact that public image of enterprises would be universally popularized.  
  
In conclusion, although I believe that companies prioritize to make profits, I favour that they should have social responsibilities.
@baosoftware1 This essay will immediately fail the task accuracy portion of the scoring guidelines and as such, receive a failing score in the end. That is because you show a clear lack of English comprehension / understanding when it comes to the provided instructions. You decided to discuss both sides of the issue in addition to your personal opinion when all that was being asked of you to do was to pick a side to discuss and then support that discussion with evidence coming from either personal experience or public information. There was no need to discuss both sides in this essay since the instruction uses the word "or" which means a choice must be made. If you were to discuss both sides and give an opinion, the essay would have instructed you to "discuss both sides and give your opinion." Since that is not the instruction, you will be understood to have misunderstood the instructions and effectively discussed the wrong topic in the essay. In such cases, the essay cannot receive a passing score.