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***Cultures and traditions change from generation to generation.***  
## Why does this happen? What can be done to change it?

  
  
That our deep-seated cultures and customs have changed between generations appears to be profoundly recognised. In a family, the lessened connection between members and the omission of the young towards those values leads to that circumstance. Several approaches can be taken to figure it out.  
  
Undeniably, cultural and traditional values are passed down by the senior generation to their junior ones. When they remain their strong kinship in a family, grandchildren are able to approach stories and practices related to invaluable traditions and customs; however, these days, the young and their grandparents seem to form an unseen gap which has hindered them from understanding each other and building up their close-knit relationship. For this reason, variety of lessons in term of cultures cannot be transferred properly and effortlessly. Additionally, many youngsters consider those values old-fashioned, therefore, they choose to ignore or discard those implementations. Compared to their senior who are familiar with many cultural practices, they have a preference for some more trendy and enjoyable activities.  
  
In order to address this phenomenal, all of us must join hands. Parents, in a family, should be a bridge between two other generations because they can help to strengthen the family connection. For example, parents can hold regular family reunions where the young can listen to the old in the family. Thanks to those events, such traditions and customs can be inherited to some extent. Moreover, the press, online and offline, should pen more articles and stories to unravel and emphasise our entrenched values which call for concern from the young to preserve them. To draw more attention, those pieces of news should be made more interesting and enchanting with both facts and illustrations.  
  
To sum up, we face the difference of how each generation reckon about our precious cultures and traditions. Regarding preservation of those cultural and conventional treasure, it is indispensable to know the causes in advance.
***Some people think that the purpose of museums should be to attract and entertain young people. Other believe that the purpose of a museum is to educate, not entertain.***  
  
## Discuss both viewpoint and give your own opinion.

  
  
Museum is an institute which preserves, interprets and displays the cultural and historical objects of preceding era that represent human history. Some believe that it should be an attractive and entertaining place for young generations while others claim that museum is where we can acquire knowledge. Those who view museums as a means of educating or entertaining are not wrong to focus on this aspect. In my opinion, I believe museums can and should be both entertaining and educational.  
  
People who support the idea that museum should be a recreational place highlight that museum is a tourist attraction which compete with other sources of recreation for youngster's attention such as cinemas, sports and outdoors activities. With an appealing design and visually spectacular, museums are likely to attract more visitors who are not interested in too much educational context. It is also offer visitors chances to get hands-on experience, for example to use a model of the exhibit to see how it works. As a result, museum becomes a more fascinating and tempting place to young people. Additionally, once they are built for enjoyable purpose, they might have more opportunities to earn enough funding from the government as well as private sources that adequate the number of visitors.  
  
On the other side of the viewpoint there are people who believe museum should provide a worthwhile educational environment. Museum could increase the historical awareness among community by representing the custom, culture and traditions of our ancestors of the museums, it is like a tool that facilitates us to maintain and preserve local and national cultural. Furthermore, when museums are solely built for learning purpose, it is possible an ideal source to find out intriguing information for casual visitors, specialists and educated scholars. They offer more in-depth knowledge for public with various aspects such as history, geography and science by knowledgeable guides.  
  
In conclusion, from a visitor or community perspective, the purpose can also depend on one's point of view. I believe that museums should promote their traditional role of educating and attracting youngster as well as the general public.
Those who view museums as a means of educating or entertaining are not wrong to focus on this aspect.  
This is an opinion discussion sentence. It should not be presented in the restatement + opinion paragraph. There should only be 3 sentences here. The 2 public opinions and your personal opinion nothing more.  
  
In conclusion,  
This is not the concluding summary section yet. This is your personal opinion paragraph, the 3nd reasoning paragraph requirement of the prompt. The discussion format for the paragraph is incorrect. By removing the first sentence and developing the paragraph starting at the " I believe" part, the discussion will meet the paragraph presentation requirements. Right now, the personal opinion is the least effective presentation in this essay.  
  
A concluding summary presents the recap of the topic and reasoning paragraphs. It should not represent a continuing discussion as that creates an open-ended essay. An essay without a properly formatted conclusion might recieve a failing mark.
**Task 2:  
*Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better.***  
  
## Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  
  
In the era of development, sports are multiform and considered indispensable with enormous benefits to humans. Some people hold the opinion that playing sports in teams brings many advantages to humans' life, while others believe that individual sports are more beneficial than team sports in different aspects. Both views are discussed and my perspective will be proposed later.  
  
For people who approve team sports, it is advantageous in many ways when taking part in sports with teammates. Regularly, players in this kind of sports, like football, are formed in specific roles and trained with different professions; however, in a match, all of them have to collapse and each person needs to express their capability with the common aim of achieving a gold medal. Therefore, establishing a team which includes many players can help them to practice their how to cooperate and control their feelings in order not to put personality above common targets.  
  
In contrast, some people stand in the opposite view that individual sports create more favourable conditions for athletes than letting them play in teams due to the effectiveness of individual coaching. People believe that coaching one by one makes the training process not to be interrupted by many factors, for example, the lateness of teammates. Instead of waiting partners which lead to delay the process, practicing alone helps athletes to save time and focus on the training.  
  
In my opinion, each sport type brings different advantages and both of them are important to humans. Every sport has its own nature, therefore, because of that dissimilarity, people can not put them on the scale of benefit and discuss whether team sports or individual sports are more valuable.  
  
In conclusion, the value of two sport kinds is still controversial when team-sport advocates think that playing sports in teams can be a proper method to connect people while others support sports which are played alone due to the efficiency in practicing. I am in the middle of the scale and believe that each of them has their own role in helping humans.
The discussion paragraphs can use more development. Do not end the paragraph after the example presentation. Add a sentence or two that will further support the example provided. Those final few sentences will help add to the cohesiveness of the related paragraph discussion points while adding to the coherence of your thought process as you developed the reasoning paragraph.  
  
You could have better developed your neutral opinion had you chosen to further develop the discussion. What your opinion lacked was an expanded discussion. This time, you forgot to present relevant examples that would have proved your point. This could have been presented effectively based on personal experience or knowledge.  
  
All things considered, it is still a well written essay, falling short only because of example discussions.
## online tickets selling statistics

  
  
The charts give information about the purchase of concert, cinema and theater tickets online based on two specific age groups in 3 months in 2006 in various countries, as well as the mean they used to access the internet.  
  
Looking from an overall perspective, the primary customer of online tickets in Aus and the UK was in 25-44 aged. Moreover, the desktop was the most common way to get involved in this activity by far.  
  
As the chart portrays, Aus and UK had 55% of people in the 25-44 aged range bought tickets online during the period. This ratio dropped to 45% for the former and 40% for the latter. On the other hand, the statistics of Malaysia showed a reverse pattern from its counterpart. To be precise, Maylasia citizens surpassing 65 years participated more in the online ticket market with 40%, while the 25-44 group was 5 % less.  
  
Regarding Internet access transport, people in three countries most favor desktop computer to buy tickets. This segment proportion was 58%,62%, and 75% in Aus, the UK, and Malaysia respectively. Also noteworthy is the fact that there was a similarity in the rank among those countries between the desktop computer and mobile phone. However, each section in the latter kept the gap from 40-50 to the former. In addition, nearly 40% of the customer in AUs and Malay used the laptop, whilst this category in the UK was 30%.
The number of charts and what each chart assignment refers to is crucial to the clarity of the summary description. Without clear relatable image tie -ins, the trending paragraph cannot deliver an imaginable report to the reader. This is important because there is no image attached to this report. It becomes difficult to track the cdata references being made in the paragraphs.  
  
As the chart portrays  
Which chart? How is it identified. Do you see how the lack of a clear reference point can confuse the reader?  
  
The writer does a good job at reporting data. However, there is a lack of cohesiveness in the report due to the lack of image relationship.
## international students number by subject

  
  
The line graph provides information about the amount of overseas students and which subject they choose in the years from 2000 to 2004.  
  
Overall, business and management is prevalent whereas social science and life science has the lowest number of enrollments by students. Engineering with mathematics and computing are somewhere between.  
  
In 2000 the subject business and management had 100.000 students which will flactuate during 4 years, first goin up to 120.000 in 2002 adn then declining to 105.000 approximetly in the end of the period. The mathematic and computing classes saw a noticeble rise from 55.000 in 2000 to 70.000 comparing to the engineering which dropped to 65.000 from 75.000.  
  
Two last subjects with the lowest quantity of scholars are social science and life science which are stayed the same with 40.000 attendees where only after 3 years in 2003, social science experienced an increase in number of students to 55.000 roughly.  
  
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The summary would have been improved and seen as a more thorough representation of the original image if the 4 subjects were listed as well. It would have delivered a completely scannable overview with a more complete task presentation. It would have also added to the clarity of the subject references in the trending paragraph. Every little scoring boost helps in your case since your English fluency is very problematic and can lower your score rather than improve it  
  
will flactuate  
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Wrong tense usage. All references should be in past form since it started in 2008 and ended in 2004. These measured events have already taken place.  
  
which are stayed the same  
confusing sentence structure. It cannot be both in past and present word structures. This can only be past in reference  
  
The essay will fail based on coherence and grammar rules shortcomings.
Prompt:  
## **Society advances most when people break from the traditions of their predecessor**

  
  
It is believed that society evolves faster if poeple will break the chain of past traditions. I agree with this belief because of several reasons which will be listed in this essay.  
  
First and foremost, old traditions are sometimes will not express views of younger traditions. For example, the notion about that young poeple must listen to their parents before choosing their lovers has been prevalent in Asian countries. Adhering to this rools can bring some issues in future family since poeple who will be bounded up together will not know each others prior to the wedding. This can lead to luckluster relationship between partners and have negative impact on their childrens. In addition, in some situations our old traditions are so deap-seated that we shun to think about other ways to do a particular job. For instance, it is not a secret that youth have to seek assistance from olders since it is often believed that the latter has more life-experience and wisdom. Hence, there are a lot of cases when youngsters did not speak up, albeit they had a better solution to a problem.  
  
Second think which I should mention is that diversity of traditions can bring new ideas and spark the beginning for the breakthroughs. Many studies have shown that new idias are established when poeple commence somethink new from their counterparts and not in a cluster of poeple who do the same thinks like them. Furthemore, homogeneity of poeple will affect the environment in which they reside, thus their future objectives and plans. Going out the box and doing somethink unique will help to succeed in the world where people often connected to beliefs which they accept with out any doubts and do not want to taste them  
  
To sum up, I see no reason to obey traditions which are established in the past since they can be incompatible with modern movements.
This topic is used as a basic writing exercise by ESL students. It does not use an agree or disagree response format. Rather, it uses a general opinion from the writer to compare 2 opposite opinions. However, you have chosen to create a personally styled prompt for this essay. I will review it as such.  
  
several reasons  
This reference means more than 2 reasons. When only 2 references are used the descriptive word "couple" meaning no more than 2 is used. Familiarize yourself with number references to avoid future reference/meaning errors.  
  
Second think  
Proofreading error. The result of careless writing and lack of English vocabulary familiarity. The correct reference is " thing".  
  
There are more word usage and spelling errors in this presentation that will lead to a failing LR and GRA score. The writer should practice editing and proofreading his work next time and also, work on improving his vocabulary in relation to word usage. This is very sloppy work that shows a lack of interest in learning to properly use the English language.
***Prompt:  
## Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socializing online to meeting one another in person.

  
Why do you think this is the case? What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?***  
  
**Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.**  
  
My answer  
When compared to direct communication, virtual socializing gains greater popularity among young people. This essay discusses the possible reasons for this popularity and gives a measure to encourage physical communication in the young.  
  
The first reason lies in the cost-effective and private nature of online interactions. Instead of face-timing, young people can go to a cafe, pay for a drink and have a chat. But using a webcam, teenagers can regularly converse with their friends in the comfort of their home, which is much more economical. Also, online communication allows the young to present themselves in the more private settings of their homes or their bedrooms, which facilitates deeper and more intimate talks.  
  
Secondly, virtual socializing is a safer and more controlled alternative to direct communication. Since people have more control over who they interact with and how the socializing happens, they are far less likely to encounter unexpected accidents. Furthermore, if the person wishes to be alone, he can just shut the camera off. While he can still connect with other people and show them part of his world, he also has his independence.  
  
However, focusing only on virtual communication might hinder children's social development. In order to stimulate teenagers' interest in one-on-one interactions, parents should curtail their children's screen time and encourage them to spend more quality time with their families. Not only does this teach teenagers essential social skills but also sets a good model of healthy interactions. Thus, adolescents will learn the importance of physical communication and naturally opt for such interactions.  
  
Overall, while virtual socializing is favored by teenagers in terms of costs, privateness, and control, parents should make sure their teenage children find a balance between virtual and non-virtual interactions.
Instead of face-timing  
This discussion point is rather confusing. This phrase in particular, refers to an I Mac or I Phone feature for online video chatting. So it cannot be used as a counter reference for virtual interactions. The very nature of the phrase refers to an online communications platform.  
  
young people can go to a cafe  
A cafe is used for physical social interactions. The addition of the word "internet" before the word "cafe" would have made the online interaction reference more obvious and less confusing.  
  
Overall, this paragraph creates confusion for the reader due to improper word reference usage. Reference to online interactions need a better description to suit the prompt topic basis.  
  
virtual socializing is a safer and more controlled alternative  
This is the more appropriate and far better referenced discussion paragraph. The miter need not have used 2 reasons as to the "Why" question as only one reason is required. Had the writer used this reason immediately without a previous reason, the C + C and scores would not have been reduced.  
  
The prompt restatement was clear but did not have a thesis sentence.so there is no direct response to the provided questions as task required. So the score in terms of production accuracy is also going to be lower as it does not follow the expected summary response format.
**Task 2  
*In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.  
## What are the reasons for this?

  
How can people research this?***  
  
It is widely acknowledged that the building or house history generally draws the attention of people. This trend is driven by several factors, and some viable solutions can be implemented to help them obtain more information relating to this.  
  
There are two compelling reasons as to the proliferation of the house or building history exploration. First and foremost, being aware of fascinating building history stories from media can instill individuals to investigate more about that. For example, various simulating narratives of the building history have been portrayed through various TV programs or films. In addition to this, people under an obligation of purchasing or renting new houses or apartments, call a demand for researching carefully about the history.  
  
In order to address the aforementioned issue, people should administer the following measures. Firstly, investing time on the internet or social media is key to familiarizing people with information from google or online persons. Inasmuch as the internet is a global network with a host of persons from field and culture differences, people can gain any knowledge they have a soft spot. Another feasible solution could be to ask directly to local residents about the houses or buildings people appeal to explore the history. The help from such persons is irrefutably beneficial and necessary for people to have a comprehensive understanding of the history of these houses or even hidden secrets of them.  
  
In conclusion, the general understanding of the history of the buildings or houses that we live in may stem from numerous underlying factors, and the proposed solutions can be executed to reverse the trend.
The focus of the writer is on the interest of architectural buffs in homes and buildings. This does not necessarily mean that they reside /live in the house or building. The restatement is incorrect as the original refers to the interest of people in the backstory of the house or building they live in. It is a general interest in a non-historical dwelling. The restatement failed to accurately restate this.  
  
The incorect perception is the reason why the first reasoning paragraph does not offer the correct reasons for wanting to know about the story of the residence. So a failing score will be applied to that paragraph. IHavever, a passing score will be applied to the research discussion presentation  
  
2 out of 3 discussion paragraphs are incorrect. The essay is not headed towards a passing mark.
## Study subjects depending on the results

  
  
The paper has to be at least 4 pages long and so far, I have just over three pages written, but I'm running out of ideas. I have a thesis (students should be able to test out of subjects they excel in so they can focus on ones they struggle with) and three reasons (1. I excelled in English thoughout my academic career and would have done reasonably well in a college English class. 2. I struggled with math and would have benefited from more time to improve in that area. 3. Whether a student can test out of a subject they got decent grades in but showed no remarkable skill should be determined based on the subject matter of the class and the individual student's understanding and absorption of it in the past.) How should I proceed? Also, my professor doesn't mind if we crowdsource ideas, so if anyone has ideas/opinions or personal experience they're willing to share, that would be helpful.  
  
Prompt: If you achieve adequately high scores on assessment tests, should you be able to opt out of high school? For example, if in 9th grade, you prove you have greater abilities in every subject than the average high school graduate, should you be able to move on to college? There are a few things to consider. How would you have done in this class (ENGL 1010) as a fourteen-year old? Would you go directly to college, or would you do nothing for a few years? What would you do if you graduated from college at age eighteen? Are we encouraged to waste our time? (Do not write an essay that answers the questions in order.)