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## Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a group of students.

  
  
Some pupils expressed a strong preference for studying alone while others tend to go for learning in a group. Although they both have some advantages and drawbacks, I would rather choose the former. My essay below will outline a number of reasons to elucidate my choice.  
  
There is no denial that studying alone involves some vital benefits. To begin with, unaccompanied learning helps students concentrate better. For instance, when they study difficult subjects such as maths or physics, they demand for a quiet and peaceful environment without interruption. Learning alone can provide that, so that pupils can not be disturbed whilst doing their assignment and can understand the knowledge more exceptionally. In the second place, learners are likely to be forced to think more when they study on their own. Since there is no one nearby they can ask, they have to brainstorm more. Therefore, this enables the ability of dealing with problems to improve. Finally, studying alone makes students think independently and develop their own opinion. As learners can not receive suggestions from others, no one could have an effect on their point of view. As a result, students may create their thoughts and not become a parrot.  
  
However, I do not deny that studying in a group is another good way of acquiring knowledge. One primary reason is that working in a group can help students have more motivation when learning. In particular, when it comes to a difficult problem that one person can not clarify single-handedly, then cooperating with other people may be greatly conducive. Nevertheless, I am convinced that the benefits of studying alone are dominant.  
  
To conclude, whether we study alone or in a group, it depends on our habits and awareness. I believe each student may have each way of learning that is suitable for them.  
  
*302 words.*  
  
Thanks for grading my essay!
The essay asks for your direct opinion. So the examples must be based on first person,rather than 3rd party reasons. Kindly remember that you are asked to discuss your preference. So the reasons other people may have is not totally valid in this discussion. While the "other" person benefit will be scored, it will not be as high as when you use your personal experience, insight, or assumptions.  
  
You need 2 logical reasons to support your opinion to properly address the prompt requirement. Where an A/D or" Discuss both news" instruction is not provided, none should be supplied. A personal opinion essay is based on a single point of new that supports you. The opposing side is not scorable. You need a properly developed essay and that means not discussing the opposite, unless it is to say why it is wrong and proves support for your opinion in the end.
## Popularity of different universities in Australia

  
  
Two graphs above show the number of freshmen enrolled at Australian Universities and the flood of applications to the major courses offered there in 1997,2002 and 2007  
  
Overall, the number of students engaging in these above universities had significantly increased in each period except for Queensland School. The vast majority students entered in all these leading Australian University, especially Sydney's University had the highest proportion of participants staying at approximately 15000 members in 2007 . It's nearly twice as much as 1997's level. In 2007 , the quantity of students attending Australian National University is the second highest rate , followed by the university of Melbourne and Queenland in the 2007 period respectively .As soon as choosing their desired university, Pupils continued choose their favourite majors. Most students registered engineering and business courses, whereas history's one had the least number of applications. Due to the fact that global economy is developing day by day , so engineering and business courses are the popular Majors for everyone. History is probably boring for students , so there are very few students electing.  
  
In conclusion, most pupils were encouraged to study at these leading Australian university and choose trending majors. Bar charts show by increase in the of new enrollment of university of Sydney and Australian Nation university. In addition, engineering and business remained referred courses at the top universities in Australian.
Two graphs above  
You did not upload an image. The reader is also assumed to not have access to the image. The sentence structure is off. It makes incorrect references to a location ( should not be included) and there is no clear image identification with regards to the graph type.  
  
the flood of applications  
Exaggerations have no place in a task 1 essay, specially in the summary overview or trending statement. Simple and clearly related information statements are best for this sort of presentation. By the way, you are missing a period at the end of the sentence. The paragraph is an incomplete presentation. Also missing is an acceptable trending sentence/ statement/ paragraph. The first half of the task will fail to recieve a passing score.  
  
In conclusion,  
A task 1 essay is a report without an opinion presentation. It does not need a conclusion.  
  
Basically this is a very bad attempt at Task 1 essay writing. You may want to read more samples and learn from them before you write another exercise for the task.
## GM foods issue

  
  
Nowadays, the sale and production of Genetically Modified food seems to be more popular around the world. It can not be denied that it bring great economic benefits, but there are some serious concern about this kind of food. However, some others argue that GM food is necessary if we want to meet the demand of an increasing world population.  
  
Let start with the definition of GM foods which are produced from organisms that have had changes introduced into their DNA by using the methods of genetic engineering. It is often claimed that there are several concerns have been raised regarding this. Firstly, mentioning the effect on the environment that certain traits of GM crops might be introduced into the wild. Also, genetically modified plants grown on farms are given traits that will make them resistant to the effects of herbicides, pesticides and drought. For example, spreading of genetically modified plants beyond controlled areas to become "super weeds". Secondly, the effect on the human body should be considered. According to many scientific study, antibiotic resistant bacteria are often used to mark genetically modified plant cells. Using GM food means that people are putting antibiotic resistant plant cells into their digestive systems. Thus, this may cause to effect on the good bacteria in their intestinal tract.  
  
However, some people believed that GM food is essential to meet the demands for an increasing world population. It is applied to provide a number of benefits to producers and consumers. These consist of reduced production costs which can make foods cheaper, fewer chemicals in vegetative products because of their improved pest resistance as well as less stress on the environment due to lower need for using toxic pesticides. In addition, it also improved availability as fruits maintain freshness in seasons when they would not be normally available. These are several great benefits that this kind of food bring to our life.  
  
The second reason for continuing the GM foods is providing enough food for humans. In fact, the population is growing while food is at risk of being lacking, thus humanity wants to have livestock varieties that have some superiority in order to be able to provide enough food. For example, plants that are well drought resistant and highly resistant to pests in order to increase crop yields.  
  
In conclusion, GM foods bring a lot of benefits for producers and consumers, beside having some nervousness about environment and human body as well. In my view of point, although genetically modified foods cause several concerns, it should be continuously sale and produce because of its benefits and human demand in the world.
Let start with the definition of GM foods  
It is not necessary to define what genetically modified foods are to the reader. The task 2 essay is written with a specific audience of professionals in mind. This is an unnecessary and time consuming prompt deviation. Stick to the given discussion parameters from the original prompt to avoid score deductions. This paragraph, being unrelated to the task will not be scored. Only proper and relevant discussions receive a score.  
  
it also improved availability as fruits  
Avoid specific examples when you have presented a general reference in the paragraph. This will help you avoid being scored low on the paragraph C + C development range.  
  
The discussion topic instruction was for the pros and cons. There are only pros provided in your presentation.The essay will be given a score based on a partially responsive discussion. The overall essay is under-developed.
***Students should be primarily taught academic subjects so that they can pass exams, and practical skills such as cooking should not be taught.***  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  
  
It is said that the curriculum for student need to concentrate on academic subject than many practical skills like cooking or team-working. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this statement.  
  
We can clearly see that today, curriculum are not built to become comprehensive education in many countries. The lack of practical classes are consequently made the generation which are subject to shortage of skills which are necessary to tackle with their daily problems. For instance, nowadays, wider range of adolescent have limited experience in cooking and repairing their household appliances. Furthermore, most of the youngsters are socially inept, thereby struggling to communicate and build up relationships with others. When they get adulthood, they tend be ill-equipped to deal with other issues related to jobs, families and other relationships.  
  
Besides that, the absence of encouragement in training practical skills have adverse impacts on the perception of students. In spite of the fact that the experimental skills are more essential than academic knowledge on surviving in daily life and contributing the jubilant family and happiness, students tend to have a misbelief that having academic achievement in school and steady theoretical fomulas will help them achieve dream life. This misguided thinking lead to a numerous failures in their whole aspect of future life.  
  
In conclusion, the curriculum which concentrate on academic and ignore the soft skills will cause the undesirable outcomes for young generation. Students should be raised awareness about this vital skills and effort to improve it.  
  
My essay is marked 5/9 ielts and i wonder how to improve mark in this essay. Honestly thank all people give me feedback.
The first error is in the inaccurate prompt restatement. Providing the topic restatement is one thing. Forgetting to paraphrase the reason for the discussion topic is another. Without the reason, the opinion statement fails to make sense. Then, the opinion was provided without a discussion reason foundation. The thesis statement completes the first half of the presentation. That is why the paragraph scored lesson an individual basis.  
  
As this is a first person opinion essay of the singular pronoun kind, it is inappropriate for the writer to use first person group pronouns such an "we" in the essay. That is a grammar rule error as it affects the clarity of the opinion. The group pronouns only apply to third person-group pronoun references in the public opinion sections.
## Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes

  
  
Many people believe that importing foreign movies and TV programmes is beneficial for their country's culture. While others suppose that producing these domestically is a better way. In this essay, I will discuss both views and, however, in my opinion, I claim that in order to bring back many benefits for a country, the two of them are necessary.  
  
To begin with, foreign movies and TV programmes play a significant role in a country's development. At first, these foreign productions can expand people's eyes about the world. In other countries, there are other landscapes, other traditions, and a lot of other things we can learn. Their streets, their dwellings, their food, and their human. We can change the way we perceive them and make our minds more objective. Likewise, we can study and enrich our culture depending on the constant creation and evolvement. Thus, foreign shows are indispensable.  
  
In parallel, producing local movies and TV programmes are also extremely important. Nowadays, there is a section of society that does not care about the unique tradition of their country and runs after foreignism. Recognizing the reality that foreign movies are much more preferable, the local government should pay more attention to their movie industry. The first benefit is these movies are educational, we can be educated on our honorable history to nurture patriotism. In addition, in order to develop the economy and tradition of the country. The second benefit is that when a country's movie industry has been evolved, the opportunity to popularize our culture will be expanded. Hence, producing domestic movies and programmes both contribute to economic stimulus and publicizing tradition.  
  
In the final analysis, the better way for a country's culture is not only to import foreign movies or produce these locally, both of them are necessary.  
  
Please help me with my IELTS Writing essay!!!
The prompt restatement was acceptable because you had a template to base it on. However, when you are asked to formulate an original opinion, you lose control of thought clarity and sentence structure. Your personal opinion is so confusing, it does not make any sense to the examines / reader.  
  
The discussion paragraphs are all incorrectly based on the writer's personal opinion alone, as evidenced by the constant use of the first person-group pronoun" we in the paragraphs. The writer should first present a general discussion based on third person - group pronouns and then present a personal opinion of the public opinion. The essay does not fully follow the discussion requirements. Scores will not be fully applied because the discussion presentation is only partially applicable to the discussion format requirement.
## The importance of public libraries nowadays

  
  
Many people assert that with the explosion of the Internet these days, various information can be easily found online, therefore there are no reasons to spend a huge amounts of money attempting to update the public libraries. However, I am in the opposition to this idea, since libraries still play a vital role in conveying knowledge to people and many of them even have historical significance. To support my view, several reasons are outlined in this essay.  
  
A very important point to consider is that libraries contain an enormous amount of knowledge about various topics, and most of them are completely true. In spite of the fact that people still find it easily to access to different kinds of information online, it is noticeable that there is still a range of unverified or wrong information from harmful resources. For instance, there are variations of articles that lie about all the historical occasions in the past and are successful in attempting to make readers believe the wrong information they convey. So maintaining libraries play a crucial role in order to help people access verified and correct knowledge.  
  
It should also be remembered that a number of libraries from different countries in the world nowadays have even become the symbols of various aspects, especially education. They also consist of the beauty of architecture from a few centuries ago, and many of them have been considered national heritages, which impresses the fact that libraries play a vital role in humans' lives. To illustrate this point, I would like to mention the library of Leipzig University in Germany, which was constructed in the 1500s and has still been in use until nowadays.  
  
Granted it is true that the Internet has brought a range of opportunities to help people access various information in a brief time. Nonetheless, it is more important to remember that the public libraries still contain significant importance in ordinary life and different aspects like art, historical meaning and architecture.
However, I am in the opposition to this idea  
Review the writing instructions. The writing is to be based on "to what extent" a response that you markedly failed to provide in your opinion statement. The response /opinion you provided is incorrectly based on a simple agree or disagree statement. You will not recieve full marks due to the partially incorrect response format.  
  
The rest of the discussion paragraphs are quite strong and well structured. Your well supported discussion points will help you gain proper passing scores in several sections. You have done a good job of proving your English comprehension skills. Leading me to believe that the response format error was only an oversight on your part.
## Australian exports numbers to four countries from 1990 to 2012

  
  
The graph depicts how many percentages of Australia exports to 4 different regions: Japan, US, China and India over a period of 22 years (1990 - 2012).  
  
Overall, there were upward trends in the proportion of Australian exports to China and India while the opposite was true for the other categories over the given period. Besides, China easily outnumbered all other figures during this time.  
  
In 1990, China and India received the ratio of Australian exports bottomed at just under 5% until the 2000s. Previously, this ratio of India hovered around the level of only about 1%. From 2000 to 2010, it increased significantly by about 6% before hitting a slight drop from 7% to 5% in 2012. During the same period, the percentages of Australian commodities exported to China witnessed a surge and overtook the figure of Japan in 2007 to become the largest market that obtained all of the exported goods with 28% in 2012.  
  
Regarding the other two countries, a gradual decline of about 10% was seen in the portion of Australian exports to Japan between 1990 and 2012. Meanwhile, this percentage of the US entered a two-decade period of instability when reached the highest point at 12% in 2000 and fell to the lowest point of only a mere 5% in 2010.  
  
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The graph depicts how many percentages of Australia exports to 4 different regions  
This is a confusing statement as there are no categories enumerated in the line graph. Percentage points we indicated instead and it is this reference that should be made in your sentence as a reference point. A clearer reference would have been:  
  
*The line graph depicts the highs and lows of Australian exports to 4 countries. The countries that are part of the graph measurement are ...*  
  
other categories  
Again, no categories listed. You will lose points when the accuracy of your report is considered. Why? You are referring to non existent information. If the data cannot be found in the image, you lose points for it in 3 scoring sections.  
  
China and India received the ratio of Australian exports bottomed at just under 5% until the 2000s  
I am not sure what you are trying to say here. It seems like you are just making up references as you go along. Are you sure that you understand what the task is about?
*Task 2:  
**More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number...) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purposes.**  
## Do you think it is a positive or negative development?*  
  
Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly common for people to provide their personal details online. Although this practice might facilitate a better user experience, I believe the trend is negative as people will likely be vulnerable to cyber-crimes.  
  
To begin with, posting personal information online brings lots of benfits. The key factor is that by providing the Internet with personal data, users are effortlessly able to log into some social networks or other platforms and this leads to the convenience in many aspects. For example, when consumers want to purchase any products on e-commercial websites such as Amazon or Alibaba, they can immediately order as all the necessary information for delivery had been saved since the log-in step. Furthermore, it is uncomplicated for people to broaden their social relationship and also a convenient way to get in contact with their relatives and friends.  
  
On the other hand, I wholehearted believe that putting private details on social media open a way to execute criminal activities. The first reason is the address, telephone number and any personal data can be stolen by sophisticated cyber-crimes and used for negative purposes such as scam, blackmails and so on. As a result, people whose information are leaked might have to face up with numerous consequences. To be more specific, almost victims of cyber- crimes have gone through lots of difficulties in not only finance but also health. Their entire money in banking account is took away, which means they do not have any savings to make ends meet. Morever, the victims might contract to some diseases such as autism or axiety disorders due to the financial pressure.  
  
In conclusion, despite the advantages of sharing personal information online, I hold a belief that users should be aware of the serious risks of publicising private details to protect themselves from cyber-attack.
user experience  
Good restatement but it should have had a direct reference to the indicated channels where the use of personal data is required. Excellent work on the personal opinion. The thesis statement really helped support the clarity of your opinion. Expect to get a very impressive score in this section.  
  
posting personal information online brings lots of benfits.  
There is no need to explain the benefits. The examiner already knows what there are. Your focus, should solely be on presenting 2 reasons that support your opinion. This discussion deviation will not help increase your cohesive discussion scoll as the paragraphs are now unrelated in terms off discussion focus.  
  
So what happened to your presentation? It appears that you have provided only 1 discussion related paragraph. This reduces the development of your discussion potential as further supporting evidence is required in a 2nd paragraph. You might get a low passing score because of this. Do not waste your scoring potential. You clearly understood the topic but got waylaid, and in the process, a lower score because of the discussion deviation in the first reasoning paragraph.
The introduction to the topic will be helped if a previous paragraph is presented showing the history of human social interactions leading up to the brith of social media. Without this historical foundation, the current first paragraph lacks a proper background presentation. This current first paragraph is most effective as the second paragraph as it creates an excellent informative launching pad rather than thesis statement. There needs to be a clear introduction paragraph to connect to it.  
  
Avoid using citations or paraphrasing in every paragraph. While this proves heavy research on your part, it avoids showing what you learned, understood, and created an opinion of in the process. These are elements the professor would want to learn about from you and will add to your positive scoring consideration. Balance the essay with opinion presentations and more transition statements to smoothen out the transition from one paragraph to the nest. Specially when changing topic focus.