dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
Hello Abraham,  
  
... approaches could be ~~the~~addressedin solution to overcome ~~such~~some phenomenon.  
... set of restriction to ban (be better put conjunction because your sentences too long )which/that the websites contains ...  
  
The third, family ~~is~~ was required to monitor ...  
  
However, these could be diminished by working side ... (you should avoid redundancy word as you mentioned twice such as could be )  
  
Hope these help
**In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?**  
  
Nowaday, the number of one-person households is far more than that in the past. In my point of view, this issue has positive development such as people can be happier because they can do whatever they want at home without any complaint of flatmates, there is a downside at the same time, loneliness is one of the examples.  
  
One of the advantages of living alone is people seem to be more independence, especially young people. Since they are the only one in their house, they have to learn how to take care of themselves and take the responsibility for their own life. They have to cook their meals, clean the house, pay for their own expenses, etc. They can live the way they like without any worry about altercations from family or flatmates when they make some noise or mess in their house.  
  
On the other hand, living alone also has some cons. People who choose to live alone might confront with their physical and mental problems alone. When those individuals get either mild sick or serious illness, they must take care of themselves on their own, whilst the others, who live with family, can be in good hands. Everyone will need someone close enough to share their ideas and emotions at home. But, since choosing to live alone, people might experience the feeling of isolation which leads to depression or autism. In some cases, a lonely person can commit suicide when they are in a desparate situation.  
  
All in all, everything has pros and cons, choosing to be alone is not an exception. People should think deeply before making any decision.
Hey Nguyendo,  
These following correction are suggested to you :  
~~Nowaday~~ (Nowadays ), the number of one-person households is more far ~~more~~ than ~~that~~ in the past. .., there is a downside ~~a t~~ at the same time, ~~loneliness is one of the examples~~ (Bear on your mind about topic sentence and coherency between topic and explanation ).  
  
... of living alone is people seem (...), especially young people (Avoid repetition ).  
... they like without ~~any~~ worry about altercations from ...  
  
... alone might confront ~~with~~ their own physical and mental problems ~~alone~~ .  
  
**Note:  
Avoid repetitions, misspelling, sentence coherency...**  
Thanks, I do hope it is useful for you  
Best Regard  
Ifan21
*Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.  
Discuss both of these views and give your opinion*  
  
Some companies need that their employee should be clean and tidy up in their appearance while the other persons say that point value of quality work is more essential. In my opinion, the both of them quality of work and appearance are necessary but it depends on their productivity in work place.  
  
Currently, some employees need good appearance as identity of their own personality moreover it is needed in work. It is not only about identity for employee but also regulation which arranges the way how the employee to wear clothes in their work. However, it is not only one of requirement in the place where they work but they need also good ability to help company more productive. On the contrary, in fact many employees ignore their skills to work but those just pay too much attention to their fashion when they work. Thus, those employees will be able to bring out several drawback to company such as drop income, less productivity, and even bankrupt.  
  
On the other hand, some societies argue that quality of work is one of obligatory factor to assist and increase development of company. It should be had by some employee because it is as booster of productivity for company. Besides, quality of work like ability, and skills can simplify how the employee do the right things in their work. As the result, company will obtain some benefits by them like good income, excellent achievement , development of company and even the increased productivity.  
  
To conclude, in my point of view that the both of them quality and appearance in work is needed but if just one of them is not had by employee may be able to be harmful to company. As the result their work will be abandoned and not productive. Therefore, the both of them should be had in order it can encourage more productivity and bring good profit for company.
Hi Bekuk  
Let me give you some correction  
  
... should be clean and tidy up ~~in~~ their appearance while ...  
In my opinion, the both of ~~them~~ quality of work and appearance (...) productivity in work place (workplace) .  
  
... need good appearance as(an) identity of their own ...  
It is not only about identity for ~~employee~~(employees) but also (as) regulation which arranges ...  
However, it is not only one of ~~requirement~~(requirements) in the place where ...  
On the contrary, in fact(,) many employees ignore ...  
... be able to bring out several ~~drawback~~(drawbacks) to (the) company such as drop ...  
  
... it is as booster of productivity for (the) company.  
As the result, (the) company will obtain some (...), development of (the) company and even ...  
  
As the result (of) their work will be ...  
... and bring good profit for (the) company.  
  
Need more practice to be perfect  
Thank you
***Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.  
  
Discuss both views***  
  
Several people think that human appearance can make a sign to one another, yet others have an opposite statement which they can not be marked person by their apparel. I am more likely to believe the second statement which says that human can not be judged other person from what they wear. This is because people who wear tidy clothes is not reflected have a good attitude.  
  
Nowadays, society always following evolution era include styles of clothes. This is due to the fact that human wants to good performance in every activity. Even people try to imitate celebrity wears like their dress. For example, fans follow lifestyle idol such as wear a neckless, clothes, hat, or even tattoo. As a result, people's lives have a big impact of celebrity habits. After that, society always judges people by their wear, for instance, human appearance with that situation have a bad attitude.  
  
However, some people think that do not mark others by their wear. This because many official who have tidy apparel have a good attitude. For instance, white collar crime which exists in my country gives an evidence that a good behavior is not reflected by their clothes. Consequently, many people have the wrong mindset about people appearance. This is no doubt that, society do not be deceived on people clothes.  
  
In brief, it is clearly seen that although many dwellers think can judge people from the cover, inhabitants can be measured rate of person attitudes by their habits, not clothes. I suggest people be careful to judge others because the uniform is not reflecting their attitudes. Many people were trapped with this event and difficult to find a solution to close with other people.
hello there..  
here are some corrections for you, may some corrections help your writing..  
  
... human appearance can make a sign to one another*( can represent as their own characteristic )*  
  
... says that human can not*(cannot)*be judged other person  
  
... clothes is not reflected have a good attitude .*( as person who has good attitude)*  
  
Nowadays, society always following*(follow)* evolution era include ...  
  
After that, society always judges people by their wear*( their fashion )*, for instance, human appearance ...  
  
This because (*it is caused by )*many official who have tidy ...  
  
thank you...
**Question**:  
  
*The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before.  
  
What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?*  
  
**Answer**:  
  
We cannot hold the technology expansion in our daily life. It is in the same way as hold back the rivers. The data statistic index talk about developing of technology per year touches the vast number in almost less than fifth; moreover, it was most developed on internet sector. I have a tendency to allow that technology development being an "angle" for our effective daily life into the consideration in the fact that world today has not a primitive era in every single side.  
  
In the real world, every actions have consequences, including the technology expansion. Firstly, the drawback of technology development is being laziness invention human behavior inasmuch as people getting more manageable and accessible life. Secondly, technology creates distance to one and another. For the simple daily example is as we know every day, mostly people hard-pressed with their phone; thus they cast eyes down and created idiotic generation. Finally, in case every manufactures replace their employee to robotic machine with artificial intelligent, the technology will create the employment opportunities are slumping deepest in hell.  
  
Those problem do not matter if we tackle this problem with right solve. Every school should keep their sport education on syllabus and create a discipline curriculum to learn how to utilize the technology with positive way. Discipline subject in early school could create laziness less behavior in our adolescent mindset. Every people should have well education with technology in their hand to be aware and kind to use it; moreover, the education about technology and how to be wise with it should be human right premium agenda for counter the drawbacks. The government must create obligation for the capital about employment opportunities for human, which do not take a nosedive human undertake life with replace their job with robotic machine.  
  
Ultimately, I still have a tendency to allow the technology development. Whereas that could be "angle" of our effective life, on condition that the problem namely laziness, idiotic generation and risk of employment opportunities should be tackle with all people in across the globe. We can tackle this with insert discipline curriculum and insert sport education in our syllabus and we transform ourselves for educated well before having a smartphone. Furthermore, the government tackle a part to as obligator to create an obligation for save our employee.
**Well, hi alfa7  
Actually, you are able to manage your word beautifully but sometimes you should pay fully attention to simple mistakes:**  
1. redundancy  
for example :  
  
every single  
every and single are the same meaning, perhaps you need to choose one of them.  
2. noun singular or plural  
for example :  
  
In the real world, every actions have consequences, including the technology expansion.  
every is followed by noun singular so you should write  
In the real world, every action has consequences, including the technology expansion.  
  
Those problem  
those is followed by noun singular  
3. then, repetition  
for example :  
  
tackle  
I have counted down that at least 4 times in the short time, I suggest you to change it into handle, oversee, or manage  
  
**It is simple but it should be avoided. I hope that those help you.**
Hello Alfa, this is some correction from me. Feel free to correct me too.  
  
~~The~~ data statistic index talk about ~~developing~~ of technology.....  
*Data statistic index talk about **the development** of technology.....*  
  
.....it ~~was most~~ developed on internet sector.  
*.....it**s****more** developed on internet sector.*  
  
I have ~~a tendency~~ to allow....  
*I have **tendentious** to allow.....*  
  
.....development ~~is~~ being laziness invention human....  
*....development being laziness invention human....*  
  
Thanks, Keep practice!
Halllo brother  
let me give you some advices:  
  
In paragraph 3, your solutions cannot solve all problems. You are supposed to provide solution that could overcome all issues you mentioned before. Try to create solutions with 3 approaches such as goverment, education and technology. It would be beneficial to ease you create powerful solutions.  
  
I think, the reader would be confuse what you want to deliver with "angle". Make it more specific to have specific meaning.  
  
keep writing
**Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness.  
Do you think people can be happy without money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?**  
  
It is considered by some that money is a key to happiness. In my opinion, happiness can be found without money and some aspects such as belief and good health are the important part of happy life.  
  
Most of the people work for money so they can enjoy their well being. However, something can not be bought by money alone. To be more precise there are some self satisfactions which can be gain by having a good attitude, for instance, Buddhist monks are trained to be solitude and forsake greed, as a result, their happiness is not tied to money or possessions. It is their understanding in life instead that leads them to true happiness. In addition, giving and helping are main concerns for some people who value others well being as their own. A clear example of this is nonprofit organization, the volunteers work tirelessly to help strangers or animal without getting paid because their contributions for building peaceful society make them feel useful and be proud of themselves.  
  
With regards to the question of happiness influencing aspects, being realistic is one of the most important factors. A number of people have to fail miserably in his or her expectation as a result of setting it too high. Disappointment can be a huge obstacle for happiness, therefore, understanding the situations and expecting reasonable results are essential. Furthermore, the general condition of body and mind contribute to overall happiness too. In other words, wealth has no use if you do not have a fully functional body and good mental health. One clear example is children tend to be more cheerful than elders who are unhealthy.  
  
In conclusion, money is not always essential in order to live happily and there are different aspects such as mindset and health that are necessary for living in peace. People should make sure they are not heavily focused on money, therefore, they might ignore real happiness.
Hi naruetai.i give some advice,perhaps useful for you.  
1.It is considered bysome that money is a key to happiness. ----> you must explain more to make this sentence clearly. someone or some people?  
  
2. A clear example of this is nonprofit organization, the volunteers work ... ----> this in that sentence mention to the ?  
3. ... satisfactions which can be gain by having a good attitude, for instance, Buddhist monks are trained ... ----> careful with punctuation. better you put dot (.) before you give for instance/for example.  
  
4. This is the type of agree or disagree question.you should be put clearly statement in the early passage that you are totally disagree with the question.
Question:  
**Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school.  
Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?**  
  
Some people think that foreign language better to be taught since elementary school rather than high school. People have the different view about this statement. In this case, there are several advantages of this view but also have disadvantages.  
  
To begin, foreign language is a necessary for modern worldwide population due to the fact that technology was growing up rapidly and using International language. The newest knowledge comes from around the world, for instance, new journal or news written in English. Secondly, according to the sentence before, children will easily upgrading their knowledge everywhere and anywhere, by using technology. Third, Children at primary school are more easily to receive overseas language than the secondary school. Finally, by learning a foreign language earlier, it can make student accustomed with the foreign language.  
  
Nevertheless, learning International language at the first grade will heighten student education burden. Every semester, for example, students have to pass many subject exams including foreign language. By adding overseas language subject into a curriculum, it will confiscate their playing time to study instead. For example, they have to study language at school and do some assignment at home, while it can be uses for playing with their friends.  
  
In conclusion, I firmly agree that foreign language rather be taught since primary school than at secondary school. The advantage of this view more than the disadvantages. According to the benefits, it can be a consideration to add International language subject at elementary school curriculum.
Hi Fauziyah.  
These below are my view focusing on the contents of your writing  
Hopefully, they can help you to improve your essay.  
Good LUCK  
^\_^  
IT IS ARGUED CONTROVERSIALLY BY Some people ~~think~~ that ~~foreign~~ SECOND language IS better to be taught since ...  
~~People~~ THEY have the different view about this ~~statement~~ MATTER.  
  
To begin, THE foreign language is (...) due to the fact that technology was growing up rapidly and using International language.**(This is out the topic. it does not relate to the reason why the foreign language has the advantages when it is taught in the elementary school. You tended to explain the reason why people have to learn English)**  
  
*Secondly, according to the sentence [...] accustomed with the foreign language.* (Please, you look the statement closely. You are gonna find micro keywords of the prompts. Honestly, almost all are out the topic. If you commit that again, believe me your score will fall down)  
  
will heighten student education burden  
it will confiscate their playing time to study instead  
Actually, both have the same meaning. You should not separate them. Those can be made in unity. It will make your opinion stronger.
Roselinde Torres who spend about 25 years observing many companies stated that about fifty-eight percent of the companies cited significant talent gaps for critical leadership roles. It means that many companies had failed to grow enough great leaders. She asked herself two questions: why is the leadership gap widening? And what are successful leaders doing? And he travelled around the world to find the answers.  
  
In 21st centuries, if somebody just relies on traditional development practice, they will fail. The 21st centuries leaders must able to answer three essential questions. First, what are you looking to anticipate change? This question explained about what the leaders do with their time and understanding the world changes. Second, What is the diversity measure of your network? This question explained about the capacity of the leader to develop a relationship with people. The last, are you courageous enough to abandon the past? This question explains how leaders are brave enough to be different.
Hi Yonathan..  
These below are my thoughts towards your summary. I really hope you can review those and avoid the same mistakes.  
  
... spend about 25 years ~~observing~~TO OBSERVE many companies stated ...  
It means that ~~many~~A LARGE NUMBER OF(avoid repetition of the word "many") companies had failed ...  
The 21st centuries leaders must BE able to answer ...  
This question ~~explained~~ EXPLAINS (this is a fact so that you should harness the simple present tense) about what the leaders ...  
This question ~~explained~~ EXPLAINS about the capacity of ...  
... leaders are brave enough to beCOME different.
**The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before.  
What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?**  
  
The triumph of the Internet has initiated a new era of the mechanism in how people communicate to one another. Apart from the upsides in the transformation of communication methods, Internet generates various detrimental consequences as well as society should be able to overcome the potential problems.  
  
Initially, the general public are somewhat more individual as they consider for gaining all of the information from the Internet without asking others. Individualism certainly leads to the extinction of conventional information sharing system and culture diversity. Subsequently, due to the fact that information sharing system in Internet is free and easy, the practice of piracy toward legal right will rise dramatically and adverse to the patent holder. According to the recent study (2011) taken from Bloomberg, for example, it listed $13.5 billion dollars lost in sales in Europe, combining of all major software companies. Afterwards, the communication among people tends to be less in quality because it only relies on electronic devices never being as real as the face-to-face talk. Therefore, the amount of bias will emerge in terms of seeking the meaning of communication.  
  
In order to confront the challenges, firstly, the fundamental education for youngsters should cast a light on restraining juvenile delinquencies and therefore young generation are ready to utilise Internet in the appropriate way and they will be benefitted from the myriad sources of study materials. Next, the piracy eradication in the Internet is compulsory for government to announce a strict IT law to defend the patent holders. In addition, the technology companies are able to improve their research and development programme in order to attain the cutting-edge technology willing to decrease the feeling of distant relations.  
  
In conclusion, the Internet is clearly able to provide an array of boons in the state of communication. However, this improvement still has several pernicious damages to the vast majority of people and these problems should be solved to acquire merits from the Internet.
Dear korban  
Let me give you some advices  
  
Overall, you have done. you use advance english language. it makes me need to open dictionary every single second in order to understand your writing. and i admire it. however, maybe you need to add solution in term of education such as involving schools to educate students how to use internet in the appropriate way.  
  
and Also pay attention with paraphrase, whether the word is used in proper condition or not  
  
keep writing
hi lincoln..  
I have to tell you that I tried to make it in very consuming time.  
I'm so exhausted to create this essay.  
  
anw, do you have some advice in how I can minimise the time but I am still able to create a good essay?  
  
I need many advice from everybody..  
I think I'm running out the time to study english..  
thank you..  
your reply is an honour for me..