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## the issue of progress and economyy

  
  
For many nations of the world, economy is regarded as the most desirable achievement there is. While economy is certainly relevant to the survival of a country, I opine that there are many more respects to it than just financial well-being.  
  
On the one hand, those who prioritize only their economical goals have their defensible grounds. Firstly, the financial health of the state is one the foundational elements in maintaining its aspects, whether it be health care, education, or science and technology. Most researches as well as advancements require some sort of governmental funding, which is only available if the country is thriving economically. Secondly, an economy plays a decisive role in the people's well-being. With a successful economy comes higher living standards, better health care and education and decrease in crimes due to better job opportunities. In short, the importance of the economy to a nation is equivalent to that of the spine to a body.  
  
On the other hand, to only prioritize one's economy would be insufficient, other factors, such as the environment, should be taken into consideration as well. As can be observed from history, the process of industrialization and modernization has caused nature to suffer incredibly. In the exemplary case of China and India, their industrial developments, which have lead to buoyant economies, engendered air pollution to exacerbate. It was so serious that not until the Covid pandemic put their economical activities into a complete halt could the heavy dust clouds be ameliorated, the sky be seen and the people breathe safely without masks.  
  
In conclusion, even though essentializing the economy is sensible, it is advisable for authorities to also take environmental issues and the such just as seriously.  
  
Please help with my essay, be brutal and point out as many mistakes as possible. Thanks in advance!
The prompt restatement is inaccurate. It fails to represent both public opinions prior to the writer's point of view on the matter. Therefore, his opinion and personal reasoning, as stated, tends to lack validity. The paragraph can only receive a partial TA score since the presentation is only partially accurate.  
  
The discussion fails to properly compare the basis of the public reason with his own. The strength of his opinion in this type of writing comes from his ability to fairly opine based on the public perception. Why does he believe one POV to be true and the other false? How does his personal reasoning fit in the context of both public perceptions? The current discussion is generally based on a personal point of view alone which does not create an open discussion of the 2 public opinions as per the prompt requirements.
**TOPIC: *The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.  
## Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant*.**  
  
**MY WORK:**  
The table illustrates the proportion of national consumers' expenditure on various items in five selected countries in the year 2002. In general, it is clear that all five countries mostly spent on food/drinks/tobacco, while leisure/education accounted the least.  
  
First of all, Ireland and Turkey had the highest percentage of expenditure on food/drinks/tobacco with 28.91 per cent and 32.14 per cent respectively. Italy, Spain and Sweden, on the other hand, did not have as much expense on this category as the rest. For clothing/footwear, the majority of the selected countries shared a quite similar amout. However, Italy stood out with 9 per cent spent on the category.  
  
Spain accounted the lowest proportion for leisure/education with only about 2 per cent. The percentage were slightly higher for Ireland, Italy and Sweden, and Turkey was in the lead with over 4 per cent.  
  
Overall, the table provides information of five particular countries' spending on three different categories, where the expenditures were mostly spent on food/drinks/tobacco.  
  
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Thank you for reading my essay, any contributions are greatly appreciated. Have a great day!  
  
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*Percentage of National Consumer Expenditure by Category - 2002*
A 4 paragraph report is only acceptable when 2 images are provided for the comparative reporting task. Where only one image is present, only 3 paragraphs are required. Forcing a 4 paragraph development results in improperly formatted paragraphs (2 sentences where 3-5 is the norm) and a lack of proper analysis presentation. It is important that the writer compress the information into an understandable 3-5 sentence paragraph instead. By using 3-5 sentences within a 3 paragraph presentation, the writer will be able to better develop a concise report that meets all of the scoring requirements. It is important that the focus of the report is on the specified reporting and comparison information. These are presented in the 2 paragraphs after the summary. Whether a report then a comparison or vice versa is presented is left to the discretion of the reporter / author.  
  
The writer, due to his unfamiliarity with the reporting format for the task 1 essay, has accidentally provided 2 trending statements. The first as a part of the summary overview and the second, as the last presentation in this essay. While the trending statement may be presented anywhere within the report, it must be presented only once. So the writer needs to always proof read his work to make sure that there is no duplication of information in the report.
**TOPIC: *It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.  
  
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion*.**  
  
**MY WORK:**  
These days, people generally believed that many people have unique abilities when they were born, whereas others do not. On the other hand, there are still opinions stating any child can be trained to have a special talent. In this essay, I will be discussing both of these claims and then offer my own opinion.  
  
Firstly, there are definitely people who had special skills when they were born or were very little. Some of them might be a superb pianist or an active football player. These can be especially benefit for children as they have the opportunity to develop their skills from a young age, and, as a result, they might become an outstanding person in the future.  
  
In contrast, there are still children who are not as unique as the rest as they do not carry unique skills at a small age. However, it is not impossible to teach a child to play sports or music. Nowadays, with an amazing growth of technology as well as training methods, educating kids to do such things is now not a concern. A majority of sportspeople, musicians and actors, for instance, are taught as they grow up and yet most of them are now successful in their careers.  
  
In conclusion, we can see that although it is incredible to be given with special talents since you were born, but it is still achiveable for children who are ready to learn. From my point of view, I totally believe that any child can learn any talents, as long as they are passionate about what they do.  
  
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Thank you for reading my essay, any contributions are greatly appreciated. Have a great day!
In the first sentence of the prompt restatement, the writer uses the past tense "believed" rather than the current reference "believe". by using the past tense, he indicates that this line of thinking is no longer applicable, altering the original statement. He must be conscious of the fact that by using the incorrect time reference, he will end up losing points as this clearly shows a grammar accuracy problem. It also shows a lack of care while writing since he is did not proofread his work for accuracy.  
  
The second sentence fairs better in terms of referencing the actual time reference of the discussion, which means that only a minimal deduction will be applied to the prompt restatement section. As for the personal opinion presentation, the writer failed to clearly state his opinion, something clearly indicated by "... and state your opinion." The opinion statement + thesis basis are the last part of the TA scoring considerations. The opinion must be presented, along with the reason for the opinion which can be dealt with later on in the reasoning paragraphs. 2 opinions can be stated in this section. One writer's opinion for each public opinion as presented in the prompt.  
  
In both discussion paragraphs the writer does not complete the discussion development by using a comparative analysis of the public opinion v. his personal thoughts on the matter. When asked to discuss both views, the writer is expected to display his pronoun usage knowledge by developing paragraphs that highlight the comparison through the use of proper third and first person pronouns. That way the public view is properly compared to his personal opinion which may support or not support the given opinion for specific reasons. Why is this comparison pronoun usage important? The focus of this essay is on the grammar range of the student. That means, he must be able to carry on a comparative discussion in a clear manner, referring to different parties as needed in the discussion.
***Question: Some people think the news has no connection to people's lives. So then it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs.***  
  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  
  
Newspaper and electronic news are some of the most popular media to keep people updated with current circumstances around the globe. While many individuals think they are useless due to their irrelevant content to society, I completely differ on this opinion attributed to several reasons.  
  
First and foremost, the newspaper provides knowledge ranging from social subjects to scientific fields. In order to meet the needs of all kinds of readers, the topics of news articles and programs are diverse. For instance, The Guardian - one of the most popular newspapers - offers a user-friendly interface which is precisely divided into specified pages such as social news, environmental issues, medical and scientific breakthroughs which allow viewers to find desired information easily. As a result, they can apply these pieces of knowledge in reality, which proves the practical use of news. Many university professors also encourage their students to read the news to help with their research.  
  
Another important point is that the newspaper is an ideal tool to connect civilization. Since the majority of the population cannot afford overseas vacations, newspapers and news programs seem to be the perfect visualizations of other cultures. Given the fact that reporters are required to interview local witnesses, information from the news is considered objective, realistic, and accurate. Furthermore, electronic newspapers are now available in several languages and locations so that foreigners can learn about others without traveling. ASEAN sports newspaper exemplifies this precisely. During the COVID-19 pandemic, when people cannot watch football matches directly, not only do news articles keep viewers updated but the comment section also allows football supporters to discuss with others regardless of their geographic distance. Therefore, without face-to-face interactions, different communities can still be connected and tightened thanks to the news.  
  
In conclusion, I firmly believe that news is excelled at connecting different people owing to the availability of global access and an excessive amount of knowledge offered. It is highly recommended for people, especially youngsters, to read newspapers to broaden their horizons.  
  
Can you give me some feedback on my essay? Thank you so much!
It is important that the writer does not imply his personal opinion in the opening sentence of the prompt restatement + personal opinion section. That is because the task accuracy score of this section, relies on the method by which the exam taker can restate the original prompt, without altering the original slant of the discussion. That alteration happens when the writer presents a non-supported bit of information that is not found in the original presentation. This is what happened in this scenario. The writer presented information that cannot be seen once the examiner compares his prompt restatement with the original prompt. That lack of support is what will cause the points deductions due to alterations. That is why I advise the students to avoid presenting non-related information in the prompt restatement. Restate the original topic and public opinions sentence by sentence, without any additional information. Additional information may only be presented, with points awarded for it, in the personal opinion statement as the added information will give clarity to the opinion of the writer in a summarized form. These are the exact reasons why the current prompt restatement + personal opinion of the writer cannot be considered accurate nor worthy of a passing preliminary score. It does not fall under the guidelines that would allow it to get a high paragraph scoring consideration.  
  
The writer has also forced several errors in his writing presentation that will prevent the awarding of passing or high scores based on the scoring rubic. This was the outcome of the overwritten, but not proof-read essay. With almost 400 words written, I am worried that the writer will miss out on writing a truly quality and content based essay during the actual test. Keep the discussions simple and within 300 words only. 275 words being the most ideal number of words that will help the test taker avoid too many point deductions during the actual test.  
  
The essay tries to discuss too much, but develops too little of the content. One will gain a better score with a single, but fully developed presentation topic in a paragraph, than presenting several topics, but not really developing the explanation to a believable extent for each. The reader is not convinced of the validity of the discussion because of too many points being made in the presentation. Focus on one topic or two related topics next time. 2 topics that can be connected through the correct use of transition words, phrases, or better yet, transition sentences.
Well, I think that for task 2 IELTS writing, this is probably too much and you might spend a lot of time planning and writing than the recommended 40-minute time limit. Your vocabulary is good enough, but I think there is still space to improve for content. I think you should include more impacts of the problem, that way your essay is more trustworthy for the reader :) Anyways, I hope you will do well on the test and keep up the good work!
## evaluation of online education

  
  
In the digital age, there has been a dramatic increase in the number and variety of online courses available to students. Some students perceive it as an advantageous aid for themselves while taking exams and doing most tests; while, others claim that when studying online, they can not grasp their knowledge effectively. This essay will discuss both benefits and setbacks.  
  
On the one hand, students can establish a flexible schedule and reduce greatly expenses through online learning courses, which means that students are able to learn at an appropriate time and invest their savings in a lucrative business. This actually gives them a chance to gain new skills, accumulate knowledge in the field that they're fond of. Besides, studying online provides students with undemanding learning conditions, so students rarely withstand peer pressure.  
  
On the other hand, online learning courses limit students' communication with each other so they are deficient in communicative skills, which may affect their futuristic occupation greatly. Furthermore, almost every online learning course emphasizes theory rather than practice. As a result, students are lack of practical aspects, which is attributed to passive learning methods. This is the reason why they find it less effective learning than that of the classroom.  
  
In brief, online courses can be both positive and negative. However, if students know how to figure out an advisable learning method, online courses will be functional and fruitful.
There is a problem with the implied prompt in this presentation which will prevent me from offering an accurate review of the essay. The writer has chosen to create his own prompt that combines 2 distinctly different topics:  
  
1. Advantages and Disadvantages of Online Classes  
2. Advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course  
  
Therefore, the writer will not be able to present a valid discussion for either prompt that can be properly scored within a 4 paragraph presentation. An exam taker practicing for the test should never attempt to create his own prompt for practice essays. It results in a messed up and invalid prompt presentation. It is not reviewable within the required parameters.  
  
I am confused as to which of the 2 aforementioned prompts he is responding to. his title and the content are not connected / the same.
## the value of fuel and other goods exported

  
  
***The graph below shows the total value of exports and the value of fuel, food and manufactured goods exported by one country from 2000 to 2005.  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.***  
  
The charts demonstrate the value of products exported, especially in fuel, food, manufactured goods of one country during the 5-year period from 2000 to 2005.  
The price of goods exported from this country increased in general but particularly, these figures decreased by 50000 dollars between the year 2000 and 2002 and began to rise sharply 4 years later which nearly tripled in the final year than that in the initial year.  
  
The value of export was not the same between different kinds of goods within one country. It is clear to see from the charts that there were three trends of exported value corresponding to fuel, food and manufactured goods. Firstly, food had the least contribution in the total value export which remained stable at 5000 dollars level during 6 years. Secondly, the profit earned from selling fuel to others of this country made up the highest figure in 2000 but these declined gradually through 2000 to 2005. For manufactured goods, this data fluctuated between 2000 and 2005 from nearly 16000 dollars to approximately 25000 dollars.  
  
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Charts are the general reference to the measurements provided in an image. Such a reference is considered vague and not very useful in presentations where accurate referencing is a must. The correct image description is needed to help the reader understand the type of measurements used and, allow them to plot the same on their own if they have to. Therefore, the report must be specific about the type of chart used. In this case, the reference should be 2 line charts. The plural of the word is used to indicate 2 seperate line chart functions. The number of charts should be used to clearly seperate the information contained in each chart. A collective summary such as the one presented here lacks clarity and cannot help in the reconstruction of the said image.  
  
There are 2 images presented. Whenever there is more than 1 image present, the writer must use the 4 paragraph format in order to create a clear separation in information references. His spacing in the page must be clear. The Enter or Return button must be used to clearly show the paragraph separation in reference to information presentation. That is not very clear in this current format and as such, makes it appear like there are 2 paragraphs that were incorrectly formatted. The writer has an option for the summary overview:  
  
- Combine the trending reference with the summary to create a single paragraph of up to 5 sentences.  
- Create a separate trending reference of at least 3 sentences to meet the minimum paragraph requirement.  
  
Either way is acceptable but, the first representation normally gets the higher score.
I take it that the writer is reviewing for the IELTS test alone. Something that I surmised because, instead of writing a simple 4 paragraph response paper, he wrote a 2 page opinion paper instead, as if submitting the paper in a classroom setting. That is an error in judgement on the part of the author. The test wishes to do a simple, written conversation type of English test. It is not something that needs to be over informed, nor over presented. It only needs to have sufficient information to prove the English comprehension and writing skills of the exam taker. There are only 40 minutes allotted to write the best quality essay during the test. That is not accomplished by simply writing a long essay. That normally results in a failing essay test due to scoring deductions that could possibly be applied.  
  
The test will already fail due to exaggerated word usage, incorrect usage of terms, and often confusing references. All of which stem from the effort the writer is making to impress the examiner with his word usage. That is exactly where the long writing errors come in. This is not a mere vocabulary test. It is a test of language usage accuracy for the most part. Something this essay clearly fails to do.  
  
Unless the writer learns to write less, but with more meaning, he will not be able to pass the test. Consider all the scoring considerations and write accordingly, within no more than 300 words. Then, maybe, the author will have a chance to pass the test. As of now, that is not possible.
## **The chart below shows the percentage of Australian people who were born in different places of the world.**

  
  
The line chart illustrates the percentage of Australian people born in different countries of the world from 1976 to 2011. The initial impression from the chart is that the figure for people born in Asia and Other enjoyed an upward trends, while that the opposite was true for the UK. Addition, The total population witnessed a slight decrease within first 25 years then increased 10 years later.  
  
The proportion of Australian people who were born in UK, Other and Asia are approximately 14%,11% and 13% respectively. Over the next 25 years, Australian people born in UK witnessed a dramatic decrease of nearly 7% in 2001, in contrast to the figures for Other and Asia went up steadily to around 12% and 7% correspondingly. As can be seen from the total figure, Australians gradually decreased from around 22.5% in 1976 to nearly 20% in 2001.  
  
In the following 10 years, the percentage of Australians born in UK dropped to 5%, while that there were a significant increase of 15% and above 12.5% in the number of population of Asia and Other sequentially. In addition, the total figure reached its highest peak at 25%.  
  
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The summary overview the writer has presented is conflicting. There is a difference between the meaning of "the world" and "parts of the world". The former refers to a totality, while the latter indicates certain areas only. The image refers to only specific parts of the globe, hence "parts of the world". This is an error in phrase reference that has affected the validity of the report and will receive deductions for its inaccurate referencing.  
  
For the trending summary, it is best to mention general references without actually mentioning any specific countries yet. Using a simple upward and downward trend based on the years indicated would have sufficed and been better marked in terms of summation.