dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
***The table above gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.***  
  
The table informs the goods on which consumer spend in five countries which located in Europe in 2002. Overall, the most obvious fact is the most of food, drink, and tobacco were sold in Turkey, meanwhile most of clothing and footwear were sold in Italy. However, leisure and education were the smallest items were sold.  
  
For food, drink, and tobacco, most of those were sold in Turkey and Ireland with 32.14 percent and 28.91 percent respectively. The percentage of the goods sold in Spain and Italy was 18.80 percent and 16.36 percent meanwhile Sweden was the least consumer of the goods with 15.77 percent.  
  
Clothing and footwear were the loads that had a significant decreasing gap with the previous mentioned goods, having no more than nine percent. The percentage of the freight bought by Ireland, Spain and Turkey was just above 6 percent meanwhile Sweden was 5.4 percent. The other items were leisure and education. Turkey spent 4.23 percent while Italy and Sweden had the same number approximately at 3 percent. Spain spent the least number on it with only spending 1.98 percent.  
  
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Any corrections and suggestions will be appreciated.  
  
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Hallo here my suggestio for you..  
  
... the goods ~~on~~ which consumer spend in five countries ~~which~~are located in ...  
..., meanwhile the most of clothing ...  
... smallest items were sold in those countries .  
  
The percentage of the goods(what type of goods?? ) sold in Spain (...) was the least consumer ~~of the goods~~of those items with 15.77 percent. (repetitive goods)  
  
... Spain and Turkey was just above 6 percent meanwhile Sweden was 5.4 percent. The other items ...(Be careful, it almost shopping list)  
  
good luck
Hi Mr Ivan, Here are my correction  
  
1. ... goods on which consumer spend in five countries ...  
[ i think it is not about the goods but the money that consumer spent on goods ]  
2. The percentage of the goods sold in Spain and Italy  
[ it would better if you explain what the goods are ]  
3. Clothing and footwear were the loads (...) no more than nine percent.  
[ you should mention in which country/countries ]  
  
suggestion :  
it would be better if you not write it like a shopping list.  
goodluck
**In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.  
  
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.**  
  
The gap year before taking third-level education in some countries is harnessed by the youth to take a chance in either working or travelling. I would argue that the option simultaneously brings merits and drawback. In terms of benefits, young people will get such a memorable memories when they decide to travel as well as valuable experiences and some money when they opt to work; however, there is also disadvantage, such as they feel reluctant to continue their study.  
  
With regards to advantages, many young people harness this gap year for working in fields that they are very interested in or traveling to some new places. For example, those who choose to work before taking tertiary education will get involved in a work, feeling the exposure in this situation would lead to gaining new precious experiences and insights as well. Subesequently, they will garner some amount of money, which they can save for admission fee when entering university. Another advantage is young people can also opt for exploring new locations that they have not been before. As such, it will absolutely bring memorable memories and they could understand themselves better due to experience in travelling.  
  
However, there is also a demerit that young people will get if they are not paying attention carefully, which is the volition to continue to study. Taking my friend named Uwi as an example, they decided to exploit this gap year by doing some paid work. Feeling preoccupied with her job due to generating some money, she started thinking to deter her study, and as yet she has not entered University to pursue her higher education, which I think more important for young people.  
  
In brief, there are advantages and drawback when it comes to harnessing the gap year after finishing senior high school. The youth should be wise to utilize this situation, otherwise it would bring disadvantage. Moreover, the examples of merits and demerit that are mentioned should be taken into consideration for young people
Trump celebrates his victory in the Hilton Hotel in Midtown Manhattan and during the triumph speech; he congratulated Hillary Clinton for the competitive and hard-fought campaign.  
  
In contrast, after witnessing a devastating result, Hillary Clinton put an end to her presidential campaign in a Manhattan hotel ballroom, the same hotel as she had begun it. However, she is able to say her final speech, not to soothe her crying supporter, but to reveal that the meaning of this election to her is about building an America that is hopeful, inclusive and big-hearted. In addition, she also encourages the people who share the same defeated feeling with her, as she said, "This loss hurts, but never stop believing that fighting for what's right is worth it."  
  
This loss is not only a deeply painful surprise for Clinton, the first female presidential nominee of a major political party, but also for the Democrats. Furthermore, the Democratic Party should be dealt with the unclear future since most of the potential generation candidates are graying septuagenarians while Michelle Obama has expressed her disinterest for become a president. In the meantime, several questions are addressed to the Democrats for this defeat since the Democrats is the party that nominated the first black president who once discriminated by Trump.  
  
After all, President Obama urges Americans to keep the peaceful transition after the election result revealed and to stay encouraged in politic as they will bring change although the results were sometimes disappointing.  
  
Source : time
**TED Summary : Every Kid need a champion - Rita Pierson**  
  
Nowadays, the value of human connection is rarely discussed by educators. The significant relationship between the educators and the student is the key to guide student reaching their potential. The teacher can become a good actors and actresses in changing students from nobody into somebody by leaving a legacy of relationship that could never disappear. Even though there are many students who have a bad behaviour and influence the teaching value, but actually, the students need to be seen and feel like they are valued. Educators can become a champion to every child and create a wonderful world which have the students who not afraid to take a risk.
@nda18 Hi Nurul,  
I think it is good but let me help you to fix minor problem.  
I hope it will be useful for you.  
  
... behaviour and influence ON the teaching value, ~~but~~ actually, the students ...  
well, this is a contradiction issue, at first you mentioned double conjunction. please, be careful Nurul :)  
so this the formula,  
even though sv, sv not even though sv, but sv  
  
the students who ARE not afraid to take a risk INTO CONSIDERATION.
**TED Summary Cameron Russell**  
  
Image is powerful and superficial. Image can transform mindset of someone in a second and sometimes bring huge impact in our lives. Cameron Russell, as a TED speaker and a professional model for more than a decade, was started her history became a model. He was awarded by tall, slender figures, femininity and white skin. She also illustrates several difference photos between her real life and her image which is constructed by several people such as some experts, hairstylists, makeup artists, photographers and stylists. All of essential elements combining their ability and build Cameron image they want. In the other hand, not only free stuff, but also she got simplicity in daily life. For illustrate, someday she went to a store and she forgot brought money. Fortunately, the store gave her the clothes for free. She regret since she got that things because how she looks, not who she is. It is like people more attention for how they look and no who like they are.
Dear Dioba, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!  
  
Image can transform **the** mindset of someone in a second **perception** and sometimes **it** bring**s****a** huge impact in our lives.  
  
She also ~~illustrates~~**illustrated** several difference (...) which ~~is~~**was** constructed by several ...  
  
All of essential elements ~~combining~~**combined** their ability and ~~build~~**built** Cameron image **that** they want**ed**.  
  
It ~~is~~**was** like people (...) how they look**ed** and no**t**~~who like~~ they ~~are~~**were**.  
  
Regards
Hello brother  
let me give you some inputs  
  
~~Image~~ the image is ...  
... the Image can transform ~~mindset~~the mindset of someone in ...  
..., femininity(,) and white skin.  
... her image which is are constructed by several (...), photographers(,) and stylists. All of (the) essential elements ...  
She regret(s) since she got that(those) things because ...  
  
Let me give you some comments. you need to improve your understanding regarding the subject+verb agreement. It will be the beneficial aspect for you since you made most of the mistakes on singular/plural and add "s/es" when it is simple present with the subject (He / she /it). and please vary your vocabulary in order to avoid repeated word  
  
good luck
Image is SO powerful and superficial. ~~Image~~ IT can transform mindset ...  
Cameron Russell, ~~as~~ a TED speaker and (...) a decade, ~~was~~ started **[PAY MORE ATTENTION ON ACTIVE-PASSIVE FORM AND ITS APPROPRIATE USING WITH REGARD TO ITS MEANING]** her history AS SHE became a model. He was awarded by A tall, slender figure~~s~~ , femininiE and white GIRL. *She also illustrates (...) image which is ~~constructed~~ CREATED by several people ...***POOR COHERENCE WITH THE PREVIOUS SENTENCE**  
  
... and she forgot ~~brought~~ BRINGING money.  
She regret IT since she got ~~that~~ THOSE things because (...) more attention for[/s MORE ATTRACTED ON how they look ...  
  
**OVERALL, THERE IS NO MANY PROBLEMS ON THE STRUCTURE OF YOUR SENTENCES, BUT YOU NEED CONCERN ABOUT THE FLOW OF YOUR WRITING. USING COHESIVE DEVICES DOES NOT ENSURE YOU GET THE GOOD FLOW. STILL, EACH IDEAS SHOULD BE LINKED EACH OTHER.**
Hello dioba, I will give you my correction for your writing.  
  
The i mage is powerful and superficial. ~~Image~~It can transform (...) and sometimes ~~brin~~ g huge impact in our lives. >> The image is powerful and superficial.  
  
Cameron Russell, as a TED's speaker and ~~a~~ professional model ...  
  
She also ~~illustrates~~illustrated several ~~difference~~different photos between her ...  
  
... she went to ~~a~~ store and she forgot to brought ...
Hi @Dioba, below are my thoughts on your summary.  
  
Image is powerful and superficial. Image can transform mindset of ...  
*Images as the best form of entertainment these days open up the world. The reason is perfectly plain that image can alter people' state of mind regarding our lives.*  
  
Well, actually in your summary you mentioned Cameron Russel in 2 gender, sometimes you writes she and he. I think you should painstakingly consider about the subject :)
hi dioba here is my correction for your summary  
  
~~Image~~the cutting-edge technology can transform a human mindset ~~of someone~~ in a second time and sometimes it bringS huge impact in our life~~ves~~ .  
  
Cameron Russell, ...... **He** was awarded by tall, slender figures, femininity and white skin. **She** also illustrate~~s~~Dthe several difference of photos between her real life (make sure that you know the speaker is man or woman and write by she only or he only)  
  
hope it helps dioba (^.^)
**TED Summary : A simple way to break a bad habit | Judson Brewer**  
  
Break a bad habit just like to try an attention on something. First, Evolution learning process currently know by scientist and basic nervous system have been founded, it consist of positif and negative enforcement. For example taste of some food that make you want to eat more. Brain have to send signal to body such as remember what you eating and where you find it. This related to the memory to desire something that you really like. There are several cause such as ways, trigger, behaviour and reward. Also, eat something that make you feeling good and feel better like chocolate, same process but different trigger. Brain is always try to push us to eat what we want to. This effects makes not good for our body. Another examples from natural brain proses, smoking bad for people who addictive on it. They being curious is the main aim for people to test it as they know the taste is not good but they think it make them feel comfortable.One the solution is change our behaviour by our habit. Always remember that the bad activity can make our body to suffer some disease. It can be done by concern with your body every days.
hai dika  
I think it is a good summary  
let me give you some advice  
hope it helps  
  
First, ~~E~~e volution of learning process (...), it consistsboth~~of~~~~positif~~positive and negative enforcement.  
  
For example, (<<<< do not forget to use comma after example)the taste of some food that makes you want to eat more.  
  
...send a signal to the body such a remember about food that you eat and where you find it  
  
There are several causes such as ways, ...  
... that makes you feeling ~~good and feel~~ better like chocolate, the same process ...  
  
Brain is always ~~try~~trying to push us to ...  
  
This effect~~s~~ makes not ...  
Another example~~s~~ from natural brain ~~proses~~process , smoking ~~is~~ bad for people ...  
  
thanks
... habit just like to ~~try an~~pay attention on something. First, ~~Evolution~~THE EVOLUTION OF learning process ~~currently know~~IS CURRENTLY KNOWN by scientist ~~and~~ . AFTERWARDS, basic nervous (...) founded, it ~~consist~~CONSISTS of ~~positif~~POSITIVE and negative enforcement.  
  
Brain ~~have~~HAS to send A signal to body such as ~~remember~~REMEMBERING what you ~~eating~~EAT and where you find it. This ~~related~~RELATES to the memory to ...  
  
There are several ~~cause~~EFFECTS such as ways, ...  
~~Also~~SUBSEQUENTLY , ~~eat something that make~~EATING MAKES you feeling good ...  
Brain ~~is always try~~TRIES to push us to ...  
This effects ~~makes~~MAKE not good for our body.  
... proses, smoking IS bad for people who ...
The line graph reveals the information about the number of college alumni in Canada for fifteen-year period. Overall, despite having an upward trend, women showed a higher proportion than men and it's led them to be the highest one over the period.  
  
According to the chart, in 1992 more females were graduated in Canada with around 90,000 and men showed just around 70,000. This led to a widened gap between them. Moreover, the proportion both of them increased slightly between 1993 and 1995 at around 100,000 for females and almost 80,000 for males. However, between 1996 and 1998 the number of graduated in Canada decreased gradually at 100,000 for women and around 70,000 for men.  
  
A more detailed look at the graph showed that, between 1999 and 2001 while female's alumni showed a positive trend, male's alumni witnessed a fluctuate trend. Furthermore, both of figures showed a dramatically increased in the proportion of university alumni during 2002 to 2007. Thus, graduate numbers reached their highest levels in 2007 with female's proportion more than male's proportion.  
  
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hai edho  
I have some suggestions for you  
hope it helps  
  
... alumni in Canada for THE fifteen-year period.  
  
Overall, despite all proportion having an upward (...) men and ~~it's~~it is led them to ...  
  
According to the chart, in 1992, << after year using comma  
... graduated in Canada ~~with~~at around 90,000 and men ...  
  
... the number of graduate~~d~~S in Canada decreased gradually ~~at~~to 100,000 for women ...  
  
... showed that~~,~~ between 1999 and 2001, while female's alumni (...) witnessed a ~~fluctuate~~fluctuation trend.  
... figures showed a ~~dramatically~~ dramatical increase~~d~~ in the proportion of ...  
Thus, graduate's numbers ...  
  
thanks
***Global warming is one of the biggest threats human face in the 21 st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at an alarming rate. What problems are associated with this and what some possible solutions?***  
  
Human is faced with the sea levels at dangerous rate affected by the climate change phenomenon. One of the possible problems appeared regarding this trend is the inundation of land in the coastal area and workable solution for this issue is the construction of sea barrier.  
  
Flooding in seashore area is one of the effects of global warming. This happens if sea levels increase and the absorption of land is worst. As a result, more people are forced to leave their home for shelter. Besides, the risk of harvesting failure would come, reducing the amount of food supply. For example, a current survey carried out by Indonesia Government in 2012 showed that 500 of inhabitants in north Jakarta have been relocated to the refugee camps since elevation of inundation increasing  
  
However, this problem can be tackled with the building of sea barriers. This could be constructed alongside coastal area to prevent the amount of water which enters to the land. Although this breakthrough requires huge cost, it is effective for the long-term purpose. For instance, The Thames Flood Barrier in England, this barrier was built in 1982 to prevent flooding in London caused by high tides and storms of the North Sea.  
  
In general, the effect of climate change is flooding in the coastal areas, whereas the best solution to solve this problem is made sea barriers around the seashore. I firmly to society still maintain their environment since it is useless if government doing by itself.
Hello  
You have a good summary  
I have some corrections for you  
  
... one of the effects ~~of~~**from** global warming.  
  
This happens if sea levels **experiences** increase and the ...  
  
... failure would come~~,~~**and** reducing the amount ...  
  
... 500 of inhabitants in ~~north~~**North** Jakarta have been ...  
  
... of water which enters ~~to~~**through** the land.  
  
Although this breakthrough ~~requires~~ needs huge cost, it is effective **way** for the long-term purpose.  
  
Thanks
A breakdown of the information about recent music in the websites in 15 days, started in the early day is compared in the line chart. Overall, the both of figures show an upward trend. In any case, pop parade music is by far most popular in websites.  
  
Initially, by first day the widen gap has been seen between both graph. After days three, the proportion of Pop Parade is experience significantly decrease until day five at 60,000 while the fluctuation in level of Music choice at the same day by 20,000. In addition, by day seven, the lowest number of level of Pop Parade is appeared to be true. Nevertheles, the music choice have slightly different number by 10,000.  
  
Turning to the last eight days, in day nine until eleven the level of Pop Parade experiences a sharp rise while the proportion of Music Choice has different pattern. In day twelve, the level of Music choice surprisingly overtakes the place at 120,000. It makes the level of Pop Parade significant drop to 80,000. In other case, in days fourteen, the level of Pop Parade takes back again the first position at 160,000 and succesfully reaches a peak in the end of days. Also, level of music choice experiences a sharp decrease at 70,000.  
  
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Dear Irianto, here some advice for your writing and feel free to correct me too!  
  
... pop parade music **proportion** is ~~by far~~**the** most popular in websites.  
  
... the proportion of Pop Parade ~~is~~ experience**s****a** significant~~ly~~ decrease until (...) the fluctuation ~~in~~ level of Music choice ~~at the same day~~**shows** by 20,000.  
  
..., the lowest number ~~of~~ level of Pop Parade ...  
  
....overtakes the place at 120,000~~.~~**,**~~It makes~~**while** the level of Pop Parade ...  
  
Regards
**Article Summary - Liberty moves north**  
  
It has been 2 decades since Canadian government happily admits immigrants. Even there are has been a proliferation of refugees more than 300,000 people a year, it is a trigger to welcomed more asylum-seekers which have reached 1% of its total population. It is a higher proportion than any other big, rich countries such America or Britain.  
  
There are two predominant reasons supporting Canadian's successful. Firstly, they not only invite them to come but helping them find employment and housing. They believe that "multicultural heritage" is beneficial aspects of creating prosperity and peaceful. Not every country is able to follow what Canada does since it pertains to a security system. Secondly, educate citizens to understand a financial issue. Canada has been managing its public finances conservatively and its prime minister has created a regulation to give a tax cut to the middle level and attain more and increased the higher tax to help for it.
*It has been 2 decades* since Canadian government *happily admits immigrants.* Even there are has been [DOUBLE VERB] a proliferation of refugees (...) asylum-seekers which*have reached 1% of its total population. It is a higher proportion than any ...* STILL TO SIMILAR WITH THE SOURCE. HERE I COPIED FROM THE LINK YOU ATTACHED: *It happily admits more than 300,000 immigrants a year, nearly 1% of its population-a ...***SEE.. TOO SIMILAR RIGHT? NEED TO MORE PARAPHRASE!****bear on your mind that paraphrasing is not a simple work. you should understand first what you read and not just rearrange or change the structure or change the verb.**  
  
Firstly, they not only invite them**[this refer to whom???]** to come but helping them find ~~employment~~ JOB and housing. They**[AGAIN, 'THEY' REFER TOO???]**believe that "multicultural heritage" is beneficial aspect~~s~~ [SINGULAR/PLURAL ISSUE] of creating prosperity and peaceful. ......  
  
**Overall, it clear that you need to learn again how to make a summary and paraphrase well. avoid plagiarism by uploading what you say as your summary when actually you just picked up some information and rearrange it into a much shorter version.**
**IELTS Summary Task China plans world's biggest spaceplane to carry 20 tourist**  
  
Nowadays, Republic of China cannot hold the lure of extra terrestrial tourism. A state-backed firm is developing a gigantic space plane. This space plane can fly up to more than 20 passengers to sky space - significantly more people than any other commercial spaceflight firm has pledged to fly to date. Before realized, the test flights will be finished in the next two years, because almost all of the engineering tests have been finished and all the subsystems of the test vehicle worked very well. Moreover, The China Academy of Launch Vehicle Technology in Beijing has designed a simple, one-piece space plane whose design can be scaled up to carry more people. The academy will have several competitors such as Virgin Galactic, whose SpaceShipTwo aero plane will offer six passengers trips to near-space, and XCOR, whose proposed Lynx vehicle will fly a single passenger seated beside a pilot. They have designed a winged rocket that takes off under its own power. The vehicle will take off vertically like a rocket and land on the runway automatically without any ground or on-board intervention.
Hi Dioba, here is some suggestions for you  
  
**Firstly, it is a crucial thing to attach the source of the article.**  
  
Before ~~realized~~**released**, the test (...) in the ~~next two~~**two following** years, ~~because~~**since** almost all of the ...  
  
... in Beijing has designed a simple a noun is needed here to form a noun phrase , probably way  
  
Best Regards.