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For starters, essays of these kind, analytical essays, do not always have to agree with a given statement. It can be in disagreement if that is the side that the writer wishes to support. Just make sure that you are not disagreeing simply for the sake of disagreeing. Remember, this type of essay is based on public opinion rather personal bias. The personal opinion must be supported by logic and reasoning. Therefore, to write the essay, without referring to the public discourse about the topic will cause an essay to fail.  
  
The GRE is a more complicated English test than the IELTS and TOEFL. It has specific formats and expectations far removed from the way an IELTS or TOEFL is set up because the GRE test is meant for foreign college graduates wishing to enroll in graduate study courses in the United States. Thus it is a separate and highly different test from the TOEFL which is used mostly for assessing college entry level foreign students enrolling in America.
Alex, it would be better if you present the types of irony within the story in a chronological manner. That is, reverse the presentation so that you start the discussion at the beginning of the essay, working your way to the end. That way, even if the person reading your essay has not read the story, he will somehow, get a clear idea of what the story is about and how it progressed. It isn't always a good idea to start an analytical essay in reverse because it becomes extremely difficult for the reader to keep track of your story presentation.  
  
You may want to consider showing the various types of themes that were presented in the story in relation to the irony discussion. The themes of apprehension, fear, pride, gossip, control, temptation, curiosity, helplessness, alcoholism and trust all tie in to the various irony insights that you provided for the story. It will help remove the redundancy of the discussion as well. It will help to break up the monotony and also show the teacher that you delved deeper into the story presentation and truly analyzed the content in order to create a very cohesive and coherent discussion of the various irony focus points in the story.  
  
Don't forget to run a grammar checker on your essay before you submit it, you have a few improper sentence structures and presentations in the essay at the moment. I won't point those out right now though because you may still decide to edit the paper for content based on the provided suggestions.
*Many developing countries are given aid from international organizations to help them in their development plans. some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?*  
  
## the economic gap between rich and poor countries is huge, any solution?

  
  
To minimise the economic gap and help in the development of the poorer nations mostly world level organizations like UNO, do support the developing nations financially and in many other ways. Few individuals say that financial help is valuable while others emphasize on practical help and guidance, Both the conditions are important according to the situation of developing nations.  
  
Financial Support is very crucial and valuable for any nation to survive and support the countries economy, to minimise the poverty level in the nation and provide the basic necessity to people it is very important for a country to be strong economically, Organizations like United nations support these poorer nations to keep the surviving conditions in a better way by providing loans from world bank. Recently, United Nations have decided to forgive the loan interest of the poor nation, Nigeria to support them to sustain the life during the crises period.  
  
Looking at the second view, support in the practical terms like situations of war, natural disasters or epidemic disease are very critical situations for any nation to survive and struggle in these conditions, during this period suppport from international organizations are quite valuable for any nation, mostly we have observed during these crises time mostly all the nations come together to support their friendly nations, for an instance recently during the epidemic of AIDS, South Africa was mostly affected by the infection, during that period France made a tremendous effort to bring back South africa by providing medicinal support and medical staff to cure from the infection and eradicate the virus.  
  
In conclusion, in my opinion, both the views are equally important for the survival and development of nations, It is mostly dependent on the circumstances for the nation.
Hi, I don't think you did a very good job on differentiating the two options the prompt gives. I think the problem lies with the prompt a little bit - what is the difference between "financial aid" and "practical aid"? To me, cash is pretty darn practical - probably the most practical aid there is. I guess you have divided them into regular financial aid over a period of years vs providing immediate short term aid during a crisis. I guess this is a valid demarcation, but it would be better if you could make it more clear that this is what you are basing your discussion on. Plus you muddy the waters when you talk about assistance to Nigeria during a crisis period, as I can't tell the difference between this and the other crises you talk about in your second body paragraph. Here are some other specific suggestions:  
  
the development of the poorer nations mostly {this mostly sounds vague and ambiguous to me - is this work mostly done by world level organizations, or is this what world level organizations mostly do?} world level organizations like UNO, ~~do~~ support  
  
Few {make sure to understand the big difference between "few" and "a few" - "few" has a negative connotation meaning very few, while "a few" is more neutral, like "several", and is what I think you mean here} individuals say ... others emphasize ~~on~~ {or "put the emphasis on"} practical help ... Both the conditions {these are not really "conditions", more like strategies} are important ...  
  
{I would begin with a transition phrase here} Financial support is very crucial  
  
nation to survive and [is critical to] {you needed something here, because your sentence meant the nation will survive and support, but it is the financial assistance that does the supporting} support the country's economy, to  
  
provide the basic necessities to people it is very important ... {this is a run-on sentence} Organizations like the United Nations support  
  
to keep thelivingconditions  
  
providing loans from world bank.{either "the World Bank" or "world banks" - you probably mean the former}  
  
Nigeria to support them in sustaining the life during the crises period. {this is a bit unclear - what is "the life" and it would be helpful to say what the crisis was}  
  
Looking at the second view, {I would restate what the second view is - don't make the reader have to work so hard! } support in the practical terms like situations of war, ... in these conditions, {maybe this is describing what the "second view" is, but it is unclear to me. "In the practical terms" would mean what assistance is provided, but then you describe the situations where aid is needed - "terms" and "situations" are different things here. Plus, "support" is vague - the prompt is talking about the difference between financial aid and expert advice - which one of these are you talking about here?}  
  
... to support their friendly nations, {"their friendly nations" sounds odd and unclear - do you mean their allies?}  
  
... affected by the infection, {"disease" sounds better here}  
  
... medical staff to provide a cure for the infection ...  
  
... on the circumstances of the nation.
Hi there. I have some opinions about your second paragraph. You see, you didn't really provide any supporting reason for the claim that financial support is important. All you did was stating that it is important, then listing some examples. I think you need to learn to develop your ideas, try to think in a logical way to answer the question "why". This skill is the most crucial because without it, your essay would totally lack content. I think learning this skill should be your first task in preparing for IELTS.
The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.  
The table compares the percentage of six different types of families enduring poverty in Australia during 1999.  
In six kinds of households, it is evident that the poverty rates in single people were by far higher. People with children were also more likely to be poor than those without. The number of elderly people who live in poverty had the lowest proportion in all six groups.  
  
Overall, 11% of Australians or about 1,837,000 people were eduring the poverty in 1999. Poverty rates among aged people were considerably low, with the percentages of 6% for single aged people and 4% for aged couple respectively.  
  
While single parent accounted for 21% poverty rates, only 12% of couple with children were classed as poor. The same pattern can be seen from people without children: whereas 19% single people were living in poverty, the figure for couples was much lower, accounted for 7% respectively.  
  
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Hi, I thought your report was pretty clear. One point you might have mentioned is that even though their percentage was comparatively low, couples with children made up the largest number of poor families with over half of the total number of households in poverty. Here are some other suggestions:  
  
The table below shows the proportion of ...  
The table compares the percentage of ...  
{these sentences are almost identical - don't repeat ideas like this - I suppose I like the second one better since it includes how many types are shown}  
  
the poverty rates for single people ... {"higher by far" sounds more natural}  
  
had the lowest proportion among the six groups.  
  
were enduring the poverty in 1999.  
  
people were considerably lower, with the percentages  
  
and 4% for aged couples respectively.  
  
While single parent ... {"accounted for" sounds odd in this context - it would be "accounted for 21% of the total", but that is not what the 21% means here} only 12% of couples with children were classified as poor.  
  
The same pattern can be seen for {or "in"} people without children: whereas 19% of single people  
  
... was much lower, amounting to 7% respectively. {the "respectively" doesn't really work here since you are just talking about one number}
## criminality in vietnam among youngsters

  
  
In Vietnam, the rate of young crime goes up dramatically in the recent years, especially in the big cities. This essay will analyze two reasons and propose some solutions to tackle this problem.  
  
Young people who violate the government law more and more grow up because of two main reasons. Firstly, there is a large number of services in regard to serving the demanding on entertainments that makes young people lose aware and spend money on playing game, parties and bar clubs. The young are the inability to earn money in order to settle for the fee of services that lead up to the state of being out of money. Therefore, the teenagers become the thieves to steal the value things as money, jewellery or cell phone even they will kill people if there is any person inhibit the action of thieves.  
  
On the other hand, the people who live in urban areas become overloaded in population and the young people who are so lazy that they can find the appropriate jobs. As a result, the rate of unemployed rise significantly that makes the amount of crime growing up due to demand for eating and drinking, all of these needs to have money. They have to become the thieves to exist.  
  
In order to mitigate this problem, there are two solutions that could be done immediately. First of all, the government should create good conditions for the citizen as giving policies to people can find the jobs more easily or increasing the level of severity of the punishment with the aim of making the crime feel afraid of punishment. Secondly, schools need pay attention to educate pupils in aware of social evils to prevent students violating the law and provide specific situations for students to become more aware of the illegal behaviour.  
  
In conclusion, the unemployed and the lacking of awareness of right behaviour are two main cause leading to get large the number of young crime, thus as the government and schools need to act immediately in order to tackle this problem.
## an important decision

  
  
After graduating, people will have to make serious decision to whether continue learning or not. While some people suppose that finding a job is the best choice, others assume that it is better to gain a higher education.  
  
To obtain a job right after school obviously brings to people much advantages in some ways. Firstly, those people have abilities to earn money as soon as possible. They can settle down whenever they want without any individual interruption including studying. Secondly, they are likely more mature than people who keep studying. Due to instead of learning couples of years in university, they work and then learn how to deal with social obstacles that gives them soft skills and experiences considerably. As a result, they would progress their career rapidly and become a professional employee afterwards.  
  
On the other hand, there are a variety of reasons why people have a growing tendency to train in university or college environments. Once graduating, they will gain a permanent assurance represented by the diplomas. As it can prove their qualifications, they would probably obtain dream occupations and are highly paid rather than others. In fact, applicators in Vietnam rarely find difficulties in proving their profession knowledge and satisfying the employers' expectation. Besides, it also can create more opportunities to broaden their career path. For employees who want to make their career ladder easier, it is necessary to identify their abilities and qualifications thoroughly.  
  
In conclusion, it seems evident that both working straight after school and keeping studying higher education are beneficial in their own ways.
~~To obtain~~ obtaining a job ... ~~brings to people much~~ has numerous advantages in some ways.  
Due to  ~~instead of~~ learning couples ... [Due to+N/N phrase/V\_ing]  
it ~~also can~~ can also create  
Dear huyennguyen203, as far as i am concerned, you should check your grammatically more carefully and try to develop your ideas in a particular way. Besides, bringing some more topic vocabulary or using if-sentence is also good for your essay.
## Excessive indulgence

  
  
**Subject: Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?**  
  
Some parents are tending to overly indulge children by adapting to their every request. This is not a positive parenting style and even worse, it causes adverse outcomes to young people.  
  
To raise good children, parents have to choose an appropriate way. It is advisable that they keep a certain discipline instead of complying with all orders from kids. They had better refuse to an unreasonable request, for examples, to own a smart phone at the age of five.  
  
On the contrary, too indulgent parents are considered to spoil their own children in some ways. Those who were used to being treated with excessive lenience may grow up taking things for granted and thus, do not treasure what they are possessing. In addition, although kids may be nice when their wants are satisfied, they will be disobedient and become aggressively behaved when rejected. Gradually, this will form a bad habit in young people. In the long term, overly indulged children are likely to become either dependent adults who have no determination to achieve their goals, or perverse and selfish youngsters who use every trick or even commit crime to get what they desire.  
  
It is obvious that excessive indulgence has detrimental impacts on children's future. Therefore, parents should be permissive to some extent and wisely put a discipline for their kids.
Tran, I like the way that you presented your ideas in this essay. You should have expanded upon your opening paraphrase by at least 1-3 more sentences to create a better showcase of your English comprehension skills though. There are also a few problems with regards to proper paragraph development that made paragraphs 2 and 3 not as effective a presentation as it should have been. Let me explain why this happened.  
  
In paragraph 2, you need to better explain why not refusing every request from a child forms a bad habit. How does giving a 5 year old a smart phone begin to create a bad habit of a child? What does this evolve into as the child gets older? There should be at 2 more sentences added to better explain the meaning of your example.  
  
In paragraph 3, you have too many topics for discussion presented when the required topic per paragraph discussion is only 1. Had you chosen to discuss how they become disobedient when their wants and caprices are refused by the parents only, you would have been able to present a strong, though short, but informative paragraph.  
  
Your concluding statement is also lacking in discussion presentation. Since it is only 2 sentences long, it is an open ended presentation You need to properly summarize the discussion topics and consequences presented in that statement. You have a good summary topic sentence at the start, but the later summary is incomplete.  
  
Try to utilize more transition sentences in your paragraph presentations from one paragraph to the next in order to help the cohesiveness and coherence scoring of your essay. Your presentations are abrupt and do not really represent an interconnected body of discussions. The next paragraph just hits the reader in the face, which makes it a bit difficult to keep track of the provided discussions.  
  
Improve on the points a I mentioned in your next essay and you should see a big difference in your presentation styles that can help you get a better overall score in the future.
## Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be likely successful?

  
  
As a student, in our daily life, parents and teachers always ask us to clean up our rooms or desks and make them neat and organized. When I was a kid, I can't realize the importance of the nattiness of the work and living environment. But now, from my perspective, students should render their rooms neat and organized which is a good approach to success. In regards to such an instructive issue, I am going to elaborate my point of view with following reasons and examples.  
  
To begin with, students who study in a tidy and organized environment will be in a pleasant mood and more efficient to complete the scheduled tasks. Different kind of books have their according positions, including drafts as well. The desks and floor and the whole room are as clean as new. In such good environment, we can absolutely immerse in our work without being anxious about finding the important notes from the messy paper-pile. Library, an elegant learning place, serves as a good example. Top students are keen on studying in the library and spend more time in the library mostly owe to the quiet and tidy environment where they could study with the highest efficiency and read the needed reference books as soon as possible. Consequently, those students are more likely to do well in the final successfully. As a result, a good environment is more attractive to excellent students and it does improve the work efficiency.  
  
Moreover, the self-disciplined students have a good life and study habit as making their stuff in order. And as we all know that the self-discipline is the indispensable characteristics of the successful elite. Keep the room tidy and organized and make minds clear are the first step to be self-disciplined. It can't be possible that a man in a messy room where litter disperses here an will success one day. Jack is living proof of that. Although he was admitted in an excellent university with high grades, he never put emphasis on his individual hygiene and his dormitory was literally in a mess which made others dislike and isolate him. Coupled with criticism from the counsellor for many times, he became passionless with study and communications. That is a really sad but warning story.  
  
Admittedly, it takes time making rooms clean and tidy and perhaps a little bit messy of rooms wouldn't affect our study and life. Nevertheless, is laziness the excuse for not cleaning the rooms up?--of course not. Making our things in order is still the crucial part of our daily life. What's more, such a bad habit like that is definitely an obstacle on the way to success.  
  
In a nutshell, render our rooms tidy and organized could not only increase the work efficiency, but also get into a good habit of self-discipline. With such two excellent characteristics, students are bound to get closer to success.
**Some people believe bicycles have a lot of advantages, whereas others believe bicycles have more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion**  
  
## THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF RIDING BICYCLES

  
  
Some people may argue that bicycles are useful, while others, believe, that they are useless or unnecessary. In my opinion, bicycles have its pros and cons, the use of it somehow depends on the rider.  
  
One of the advantages of using a bicycle is to help people to have an active and healthy lifestyle. Riding a bike can help you strengthen your endurance and can serve as a cardio exercise. It is also helpful to public especially during traffic jams. Driving a car can be a hassle and might take longer to their destination, while using a bike is easier and faster to go through the traffic.  
  
However, because of the bike's structure, most big cars on the road, like trucks and vans, their drivers usually do not notice the bikes coming their way that might lead to an accident, which is the top disadvantage of using bikes. With this, more and more 2-wheeler accidents are on the news lately. Another disadvantage is the price of the high-end bicycles, the light-weight ones, which are used for racing like triathlon, cost twice or thrice the regular price of the basic bicycle.  
  
In my own perspective, every thing has its own advantages and disadvantages, although I believe that using a bike can help people in numerous ways. Physically, riding a bike can be a form of exercise, from young generations to old people, while mentally, staying in control and keeping balance can help you focus in sports and in life, lastly, financial-wise, compared to owning a car, a bike does not need to be pumped by gas or a total makeover that comes with washing which can be financially draining.  
  
In conclusion, bicycles have been accepted as a public way of commuting or transportation, even though some people are still not convinced of its importance, I believe that bikes are more helpful to society than harmful.