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**Summary TED : why I read a book every day**  
  
Everyone wants to have a happy life and perfect, but everyone can not get it. We may have heard that a lot of mentors to be one of the keys to achieving the life we want. They say, supposing mentor is a shortcut to success. On one occasion in TEDxUBIWiltz, Tai Lopez is a certified financial planner and a mentor to share his views on the book. In retrospect, the relationship between them so far and almost impossible to be associated. But, there are a few things that unites the two. And this relationship that makes the reason to always read a book every day. There are many right mentor, who can help us realize the dream. But unfortunately, most of them no longer live in this era. Call it Einstein, Stave Jobs, Aristotle, Plato, and many other great mentor. Therefore, we can only learn from experiences, thoughts, and also the point of the life of the book. Both books they write, or also biography. That is, we must have a lot of mentors and learn from them. And build a relationship with books be our mentor, see them as a friend.
Hi masacerah  
here is my notes for you  
  
" Everyone wants to have a happy life and ..."You should put (") on this sentence because you took from tai Lopez.  
  
They ~~say~~said , supposing mentor is ...  
  
~~On one occasion in TEDxUBIWiltz~~ , Tai Lopez is a certified ...that's better if you share his name in the first paragraph than u put in middle or in body story, bad organize.  
  
In retrospect, the relationship between them so far ...this sentence jumps  
  
This your next sentences also, this made readers difficult to understand what you want to share,  
  
~~Call it~~They are Einstein, (...), and ~~many~~ other great mentorS .  
Both books they ~~write~~wrote , or also biography. ~~That is, we must have a lot of mentors and~~The point is we could learn from them.  
  
Not only jump of your sentence but you are also missing of your contents here.
**Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language.  
Do you agree with this opinion?**  
  
## cross-cultural understanding

  
  
A number of societies opine that people are not able to acquire and adapt a specific culture without learning its language. I personally would argue that this is a positive development.  
  
To begin, the best measure to study other national culture is imitating the way of the native speaks. Individuals tend to practice more by repeating what the other speakers produce from their mouth. A good example of this is the process how kids acquiring language. Children are never be taught a language such as their mother tongue or first language, but they are able to speak their mother tongue/L1 well during they grow up. It is because they always listen and the language to surroundings. As the result, youngsters get used to speak that language. There is no doubt that it is referred that learning about culture is speaking about its language.  
  
Another reason is by understanding the language; inhabitants can learn one's culture independently. Although there is no a guide to accompany us visiting one county side aimed at knowing its tradition, we are able to communicate and experience this culture by ourselves because we have master the language. A case in point, nowadays most of tourists from abroad in Indonesia do not need a translator to research a local relic because they have learnt Indonesian language before coming at there. Thus, language is one important factor in order to recognize a specific culture.  
  
To conclude, it is clear to me that cross-cultural understandings become easy to learn if the followers start initially to speak the local language.
I believe that your score for this essay would be a 4 in an actual test. You have many sentence structure problems that affect the thought process and understanding of the reader as he scans your essay. There is a lack of clarity in the way that you present your reasons which causes faulty reasoning and incomprehensible reasoning. You show a very limited ability to form even the simplest English sentences so your vocabulary and grammar are directly affected.  
  
I would advise you to try and work on the grammar portion of this essay a bit more. While the presentation is faulty, it is obvious that you understood the prompt but was hindered by the lack of grammar ability. Don't worry, you should get better with practice. It will not hurt for you to try to write this essay again. This time, pay attention to your grammar. As long as you can somehow relay an understandable thought process, your score should improve to at least a passing score.
hi Ucha  
here is my notes  
  
Actually you have so many wrong for writing, but this is still learning, that would be fine, however practice makes perfect, so do I.  
  
May I give you suggestion for introduction, I would share my idea for you:  
  
Language is not only about communication but also for feeling each other. As long as we can speak foreign language that is like we could not understand what they feel eventually. I would agree with this perspective because that makes sense for human being.  
  
then you can explain more detail with the functions of communication in other languages or the benefits of those, put on paragraph two and three.  
  
however you need to revise your writing to get better, you need to understand firstly what is the idea will you catch it. look at the examples of writing IELTS, those would help you more to get lots idea.  
  
hope it helps :)
A breakdown of the information about alumni of the canadian third level of education over a 15-year period started in 1992 is showed in the line chart. Overall, it is really important to notice that both figures performed similar pattern-an upward trend. The woman broke the record as the highest one.  
  
Initially, during in the first 8-year, the number of graduates by men stood at around from 70,000 to 72,000 and it witnessed fluctuated. However, the proportion of women at roughly 100.000 to 120.000. It is noticeable that the gap was similar between the figures.  
  
Turning to 2002 - 2006, by 2002, the alumni of women had increased dramatically to 110,000, while graduates of men escalated as well to 78,000. In the following three years, the gap between this trend witnessed widened with men and women at 90,000 and 145,000 respectively. Eventually, In the end of period the level of women's alumni reach a peaked at 146,000, whereas men occupied at 95,000 number of graduates.  
  
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This summary is extracted from an article published on November 10, 2016. Its original title is **"Starbucks CEO's Statement About The Election Will Make You Cry"**  
  
Starbucks's CEO and chairman, Howard Schultz, behaves to the election results wisely. Since he is in Hillary Clinton's side prior to the election day, it cannot be denied that Schrultz is also fascinated by the outcome of the "big Tuesday". Nevertheless, he professionally takes it easy by sending an email entitled "Onward Together" to his workers. The mail simply advises that inhabitants should move forward to live this beautiful life rather than stuck in a deep disenchantment. The CEO writes that as good societies, we need to give Trump a chance as he is given reliance by the majority of Americans. Then, the other humble advice come from Schultz is that he suggest Americans to build or create the country as what they wish by utilizing well-being to everyone. One pivotal thing that I adore by this leader is even though he genuinely stands for one party, he inevitably never forces other people two follow his choice even when he has huge power.
Dear Hujjatul, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct my responds,  
  
live this beautiful life -->  
  
*have a beautiful life*  
  
the other humble advice come from Schultz is ... -->  
  
*another humble advice which comes from Schultz, is that he suggest Americans to build up the country as what they wish for by utilizing well-being to everyone.*  
  
One pivotal thing that I ... -->  
  
*In addition, a pivotal quality that I adore the most by this leader*  
  
Regards
The given line graph indicates alumni quantities over fifteen-year period in Canada based on gender, measured by tens of thousand. At a glance, both figures experienced an upward trend. In any case, female students contributed the highest proportion.  
  
From 1992 to 1995, male and female graduated scholars' numbers showed a slight increase by 5000, yet directly fell to almost 70,000 and 100,000 for male and female respectively in the three following years. Next, the significant changes were seen after 2000 in which alumni numbers increased dramatically to 150,000 by female figures and 100,000 by male figures.  
  
Moreover, female student's level led the trend as in the end of period it rose a half of its starting point and therefore female scholar's quantities reached a peak to 150,000. Meanwhile, even though by 2007 male figures had increased almost by 30,000 as its peak, it only reached the lowest point by females'. Furthermore, the considerable gap was shown in which there were 50,000 women graduate's numbers above men.  
  
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Dear Hujjatul, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct my responds,  
  
*figures experienced ~~an~~ upward trends*  
  
*yet directly fell to almost 70,000 and 100,000 ~~for male and female~~ respectively in the three...*  
  
Moreover, female student's level led the trend as in the end of period it rose a half of its starting point and therefore female scholar's quantities reached a peak to 150,000 -->  
  
*... level led the trend when it rose a half compared to its starting point at the end of period, and therefore female ...*  
  
Regards
Tai Lopes gave a lecture about why people are required to read a book a day. At the beginning of his speech, he described how to get a good life such as health, happiness, and love. In fact, everybody wants something, but not all of them get it.  
  
Next, he presented three major factors that may influence a good life. Those are tutor, media, and book. Mentors have an important position as a role model for their followers. They may help people to experience their work. The Second is media which has treated us. It tries to show us many things to be learned. And the last is book. Book is modern system in learning that provided us many information and education.  
  
Lopes suggested collecting book approximately 150 titles. We need to deem those books as friend so we can enjoy it. He also opined that there is no specific rule on how to read it. How quickly we read, how many pages, and how many days are not required, but it is better to read one book a week. It is noticeable that everybody wants a good life, but not everybody is willing to read to get it.
Dear Ucha MSN, here some advice from me and feel free to correct me too!  
  
In fact, everybody ~~wants~~**wanted** something, but not all of them ~~get~~**got** it.  
  
... may influence a good life **for people**.  
  
Those ~~are~~ were a tutor, ...  
  
The Second ~~is~~**was** media which ~~has~~**had** treated us.  
  
It ~~tries~~**tried** to show us many...  
  
And the last ~~is~~**was** book.  
  
Book ~~is~~**was** modern system in learning **method** that provided us ...  
  
Regards
Dear Ucha, I have some suggestions for you  
  
to read ~~a~~**one** book **in** a day.  
  
In fact, everybody wants something, but not all of them get it.  
you may say  
Everyone wants it all yet factually they do no effort to gain it.  
  
Next, he present~~ed~~**s** three major (...) a good life~~. Those~~**, they** are tutor, media, and book. **Firstly,**Mentors have an ...  
  
The ~~S~~**s**econd is media which ha~~s~~**ve** treated ~~us. It tries to~~**and** show us many ...  
And the last is book~~. Book~~that is **a** modern system in learning that provid~~ed~~**es** us many information**s** and education**s**.  
  
Best Regards
Hello My Friend  
Let me give you some advices  
  
Tai Lopes gave a lecture about why [...] something, but not all of them get it.  
  
(Dear Ucha, in this sentence, you need to explain why people are compulsory to read at least one book a day, you can start it with explanation regarding its benefits to human life. if you describe hot to get a good life previously, it jumps your mind idea)  
  
Next, he presented three major (mind/predominant) factors that may influence (a good life.  
Mentors have ~~an~~~~important position~~~~as~~ a role model ...They give people opportunity to apply their theory in the real situation . ~~may help people to experience their work.~~  
  
... in learning that provided us numerous information and ~~education.~~ insights.  
  
Good Luck
hi ucha  
here is my notes for you  
  
I like your article anyway because I've ever seen this video, and I love it. I would concern on third paragraph, I think you are missing the contents, you only explained 'read'. but you forgot two others kinds of them, about tutor and media. those related with it also. you can describe like you tell about the functions of reading anymore.  
  
... read one book a week.It is noticeable that everybody wants a good life, but not everybody is willing to read to get it.---> your statement jumps after u wrote "How quickly we read, how many pages, and how many days are not required, but it is better to read one book a week." I mean you need more detail why this happens ?before come to the 'good life' . The point is you didn't put the reasons (why) but directly the negative result. Perhaps you can convey your writing with cause-effect, it would be appropriate.  
  
hope it helps :)
Angelica Dass presented about the beauty of human skin in every color. For the beginning, she shared about her family background which comes from a variation skin color. Her father has a dark chocolate tone, her grandma has a porcelain skin, and her mother has a cinnamon skin with a pinch of hazel and honey. For the next section, she told about how people think about her skin and also how she got discrimination in her school. Actually she has a brown skin, but her friends said it was a black and it made Angelica confuse about the situation. And also when she entered the party, every single person decided that she was the maid and it made her sadness. However, she was forgetting about the bullying that she got and tried to make a project which utilizes people together to ignore about their skin color. Many people support her project and she becomes the one of inspiring women to be against about skin color.
hello edo  
it is a good summary  
I have some advice to you  
hope it works  
  
... shared about her family's background which is come~~s~~ from a ...  
  
... a dark chocolate ~~tone~~skin , her grandma has ...  
  
... she told about how people ~~think~~thought about her skin and also ~~how~~ she got ...  
Actually, <<<< do not forget to use comma  
  
... single person decided to (collocation ) that she was the maid and ~~it~~ made her sadness.  
  
... to make a project which is utilized~~utilizes~~by people together ...  
  
... and she becomes ~~the one of inspiring~~one of the inspiring women to ~~be~~ against about skin color.  
  
thanks
Hi! I have some feedback for you!  
  
...it made her falling deep into sadness  
  
However, she was forgetting about the bullying ... should be  
  
Thereafter, she tried to forget about the bullying that she experienced and how painful it feels. Then, she comes up with the idea to create a project which utilizes people together to ignore their skin color.  
  
Many people support her project and ... should be  
  
At the end, she receives the supports to her project from many people and she becomes one of the inspiring women against the skin color distinction
***In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.  
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.***  
  
Some countries such as the United States and the United Kingdom have the policy that the youth should go to work or take a leisure time for a year between finishing the high school degree and starting university studies. I strongly believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.  
  
There are a lot of advantages for people doing the work in this period. The most important one is having more experience. This is important for the future student because the experience will lead the student to get the skill more than the others so that they can reach the grade better. Also, it is popularly believed that the experienced student will ready to study in the competitive surroundings. They are used to do the routines under pressure and it can be helpful for the student because living as the college student need good management skills. Furthermore, this experience will form the mentality of the hard worker to do some task that will be given when they are studying at the college.  
  
However, some of the disadvantages should be paid more attention. Many of them are spending of the time to go to the leisure than learning new experience. Research conducted by Mrs Asuna from Tokyo University reveals that after spending most of the time in the school, the children tend to spend the time to focus on leisure. This will lead to consuming much money as well. Some complaints have been reported so far by the parents that they cannot afford the expenses because of this policy. The family also worries about their child when they are away too far. It could be dangerous for the children because it can make the children out of parent controls.  
  
All in all, I believe that the policy about this should be revised in the future. From the points that I have mentioned before, the disadvantages are more dangerous than the advantages. The government should make the policy or instrument to control the children when they work or leisure so that the children cannot just spend their time without obtaining the experience that can be useful in the next stage of education.  
  
(358 Words)
Some countries such as ~~the~~ United States and ~~the~~ United Kingdom ...  
1) Article the is used for things that people usually multiperception or already mentioned before. If you talk about UK and US, people will think the same. Because it already refer to the place.  
  
... the experienced student will be ready to study in ...  
2) will + be  
  
... to do some task that ~~will be~~ not given when ...  
3. Your explanation look like to contradict the fact.
*Hi ivan, your essay is pretty good but i think 358 words is too long, it will be better if you maintain it in 280-300 words*  
  
... experienced student will **be** ready to study in ...  
  
They are used to do the ~~routines~~ under pressure **routines** and it can be helpful for ...  
  
Many of them are spending ~~of the~~ time to go to the ...
Hi Mr Ivan, these are my correction for your first paragraph of you essay  
  
1. The most important one is having more experience.  
[you can replace it with 'benefit' ]  
2. ...important for the future student ...  
[ the student future or the future of the student ]  
3. They are used to do the routines under pressure  
[ the under pressure routines ]  
4. living as the college student ~~need~~needs good management skills.  
5. ...worker to do some ~~task~~tasks ....  
[ you can replace 'do' with 'conduct' ]  
  
goodluck
Nowadays, human's job is replaced by the robot. This is due to the fact that robot more efficient than human and also human more complicated and difficult to manage. In the organization or company the leader have to build up the beautiful atmosphere in the workplace. After that, it is clear that robot does human's activities and make it amazing. Based on this trend Tim Leberecht launching about four methods to build a human company in the age of machines. Firstly, do the unnecessary, it means although the company thinking about the profit for their business, create no pressure situation in the workplace so that employee's performance will be better. Secondly, create intimacy, it opposite the loneliness. It is talking about build a great circumstance such a create a good relationship between manager and employee in the office it also makes the atmosphere more convenient for workers so that the amount of employee is not experiencing a decrease, even survive until the end of the business since they enjoyed work in that situation. Thirdly, be ugly, it means not only the alteration in the workplace, but also in their appearance such as wearing a wig for the hairstyle so that it will be entertaining one another. The last is remain incomplete, human characteristic involved in this method since making workplace feels at home so that they can organize or socialize with each other easily without any obstacles. In conclusion, although the presence of cutting-edge technology can replace a human in the office, it never replaces those methods.
Hi Mr.ryan here is my notes for your summary  
  
(it is better to put beginning sentence)according to the article was mentioned  
This trend is due to the fact that robot is .... ~~After that~~( you can change this words to be : Furthermore, meanwhile..etc ) ,....  
... it means ~~although~~that the company thinking...  
... it means that not only (...) the workplace~~, but~~yet( you can use **yet** here since you explain about comparison)  
  
hope it helps :)
Hi Ryan, here is some suggestions for you  
  
... fact that robot **are** more efficient than human ~~and also~~**besides the fact that** human **are** more complicated and difficult to **be** manage**d**.  
  
... activities and make**s** it amazing.  
  
... situation in the workplace ~~so that~~**hence** employee's ...  
  
... circumstance such a creat~~e~~**ing** a good relationship (...) in the office ~~it~~ also makes the (...) for workers ~~so that~~**thus** the ~~amount~~**number** of employee is ...  
  
Best Regards
The growing plants can increase with transfer sunlight directly down into underground roots. It supports with many light receptors in stems, leaves, and flowers of the plant. But we must notice that light receptors in the roots are not function in dark soil. The researches of Seoul National University in Korea, Hyo Jun Lee, was report that stems act of the plants have a function as fibre-optic cable that conducted to phytochromes which known is receptors light in the roots. The researches is using the *A.thaliana* speciments for this experiment.  
  
The comparison of the evidence of light source and chemical signalling use to optimation of growing plants. This show that the light have more benefit such as light transfer directly than chemical signalling. But we must warn especially that the longer wavelength light can be obstruct the bactery in photosynthesis process.  
  
Finally, we can conclude that light signalling would be faster than chemical signalling because theee was little light mobilization in between a stems and roots, anf finally it can use light signalling for mobilize that..