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**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?**  
  
Writing Task 2  
  
Nowadays, developing of vehicle in whole the world very rapidly it affects to the rising of congestiion and emmision. Thus, the price of fossil fuel should be more expensive to solve these problems. I tremendoulsy agree with this notion since this solution makes people more prefer to use bicycle and relay on two wheels than drive own cars. However, there is another way to help stop this problem, Government should limited the number of vehicle sales.  
  
The increasing price of gasoline considered as one of the best way to overcome traffic and pollution cases. It will create a speculation that fuel is luxury items thus people more likely to ride a bicycle or become a pedestrian. Taking Japan as an example. The cost for petrol there has extremely high-priced. Therefore, inhabitants in Japan more prefer to go on foot or using their bicycle. As a result, we cannot find a traffic condition in there besides less amount of emissions in Japan's air.  
  
Another measures that could be effective is stakeholders should reduce the number of vehicle production. This regulation forces citizen only able to hsve a few cars or motocyle. It impacts on the density of vehicles becomes decline while only few amount of emissions will be produce Brunei Darussalam for instance. This country had imposed the rule about limiting the number of vehicle. Thus, in this present time, Brunei does not have congestion and emissions problems.  
  
To sum up, I believe that the high-priced for fossil fuels can solve traffic and pollution cases. Besides, another method with limiting the number of vehicle production is considered as an effective way.
Nowadays, ~~developing of vehicle in whole the world very rapidly~~**the vehicle's development in the whole of the world are increase very rapidly.** it affects to the rising of ~~congestiion~~**traffic congestion** and ~~emmision~~**emission**.  
1) USE SENTENCE CORRECTLY . Your sentence not ordered properly  
  
2) TYPO ---> congestion and emission  
  
I ~~tremendoulsy~~**tremendously** agree with this notion (...) to use bicycle and ~~relay~~*(relay = menyampaikan / menyiarkan . What your means of that????)* on two wheels than drive **their** own cars  
  
3) TYPO AGAIN ---> tremendously  
  
4) RELAY ---> INAPPROPRIATE VERB  
  
... another way to help stop this problem  
  
5) DOUBLE VERB  
  
... as one of the best ~~way~~WAYS to overcome ...  
  
6) PLURAL ---> one of the best WAYS (salah satu dari cara-cara terbaik, satu dari banyak cara)  
  
As a result, we cannot find a **traffic condition** in there besides ...  
  
7 WHAT IS THE MEANING OF "TRAFFIC CONDITION" ??? [kondisi lalu lintas ???? you look like to paraphrase the world traffic jam into condition that have very very very different meaning)
**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.  
To what extent do you agree or disagree?  
What other measures do you think might be effective?**  
  
Nowadays, issues of crowded roads and chemical emissions make countries should have method to solve these issues. Some people saying with increasing the price of petrol can give the best solution. I tend to disagree with the statement because there are several methods to solve these issues.  
  
In modern era, most of people have private transportation, such as cars and motorcycles. There are using vehicles to go to office, school or going to one place to holiday. They thing it is good choice because with less price of petrol they can go with family by comfortable vehicle. For instance, in Indonesia government subsidy price of petrol and all of level of societies can buy petrol subsidy. As a result, many people use their transportation and it makes crowded roads in several spots. Also, it can cause a low fresh air for pedestrian who walk near of street. So, with increasing price of petrol can make people to choose public transportation to do daily activities in outside. Because they feel that it is more expensive than before.  
  
In the other hand, there are several methods to solve this issue. For instance, the government should be improving facilities of public transportation, such as in Indonesia. It has good facilities in a train, for example clean toilet, hygiene canteen, and comfortable sofa for passengers. As a result, many people interest to use a train for avoid crowded roads. It can be the best way to decrease the number of transportation in road and chemical emission. Besides that, also Indonesian government have 3 in 1 rule in several spots in Jakarta. It can be good alternative to solve this issue. Because, in fact after this rule happen the number of private transportation is lower than before.  
  
All in all, rise of petrol price is not the best alternative to solve crowded road and pollution issues because not all of people have high financial. But, with improvement several facilities in public transportation can be the best choice to decrease these issues. I believe government have a good method to end this problem.
Hello willy, here is some suggestion from me:  
  
... make countries should have ~~method~~some methods to solve these issues.  
1) I think you should use some methods / many methods , or anything but refer to plural. Because in my opinion, not just ONLY ONE METHOD that should given by country.  
  
~~There are~~**They**~~using~~**use** vehicles to go to office...  
2) They + Use . They ---> refer to people. There---> usually refer to "things"  
  
They ~~thing~~**think** it is **a** good choice because ...  
3) TYPO ---> thing must be THINK  
  
4) Don forget to add an "article"  
  
For instance, in Indonesia government subsidy price of petrol and all of level ...  
5) WHY USING "AND"? It's not appropriate in my opinion; Just try like that :  
  
**For instance, Because of the price subsidies that given by Indonesia's government, all of level of societies can buy subsidizer petrol.**  
  
So, with increasing price of petrol**, it** can make (...) transportation ~~to do~~**for doing** daily activities in outside.  
6) ADDING PRONOUN TO MAKE IT CORRECT.  
  
7) AVOID REPETITION ---> to choose public transportation to do
Nowadays, international fast food restaurants increasingly arise in many countries. In China, international fast food restaurants such as KFC and McDonald line up in the populated area, which have affected most of the local food business. Some may think the wide spread of fast food has a negative impact on both families and societies, but I think the traditional food is invincible.  
  
Traditional food plays an important role in the relationship of families and boosting harmony of societies. While family members are gathering together and making traditional food, the sense of belonging to families is being promoted, even though this progress takes time. For instance, the preparations of making food are allocated to everyone in the family. Through this progress, family's members would talk about stimulating things happened around them and consequently those conversations enhance the mutual understanding among these family. Secondly, traditional food represents the local area as a cultural value. Additionally, some traditional food are representative of local myth, obviously, those are of a treasure trove for mythology. For protecting the cultural heritage, government advocates traditional food as a treasure among local residents.  
  
People who live a fast pace of life and generally tend to work in high efficiency rather have a less-time lunch or dinner during break time. Finally, they have to eat fast food. However, fast food is highly in salt, sugar, fat and calories because of its large portions. As people known, eating fast food frequently will lead us to an unhealthy diet or result in medical problems. This can illustrate that people recognize the difference between fast food and traditional food, which is that fast food is an only choice for them to fulfill their stomach without an enjoyment and traditional food not only can eliminate hunger but also can please diners.  
  
Overall, humanity is a species that chases for a better world and would protect the treasure of our world. On the basis of that, traditional food would not be replaced easily by fast food in terms of health and cultural value.
**Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.**  
  
I will appreciate every kind of recommendation in order to improve my writing skills  
  
Nowadays, it is essential for everybody to hava a good financial knowledge. Accroding to many experts the financial educaion should play a hore role in every school program. The implementing of financial education will definately improve the children's knowledge about the finances and will prepare the for the real world, but on the other hand, adding an additional class will diminish their freetime and can make the children money oriented.  
  
We all know that, it is imposible to succeed in today's world without understanding the curent financial system. Nowadays, so many kids fail in the "real world", because of poor bank manangement and unrealistic financial expectations. Moreover, without any financial education, many of them are tempted to take huge loans from the banks and then within few months they go broke, because they are unable to pay the interest rates. But even though the financial education can be extremely useful, it can create several problems.  
  
For many children these days, the money are their only target in life. With the include of the business education, as a part of the school programs, we risk to make our children money oriented and even forget the real human values. In addition to this, the education nowadays is complicated enough even without the financial classes and by adding a new one, it is possible to create additional problems for both teachers adn students. if we want to imput a new type of lessons in the schools, we need to change the whole educationa system, which can be long and expensive process.  
  
At the end of the day, i think that although the adding of financial education have some negative sides, they are easily overshadowed by the positive effects. the upcoming future demands from us to design a proper educational system build around financial classes, which will be able to prepare our children for the world after school/
***Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.  
To what extent do you agree or disagree?  
What other measures do you think might be effective?***  
  
In this industrial era when people move so fast, transportation becomes one of the most important factors to serve the human need to go to other places. But, as the rising of transportation usage, the traffic and CO2 emission are the drawback and it can be extremely dangerous for us. Then, there is an opinion that rising up the price of fuel will significantly solve the traffic jam and pollution. However, I briefly disagree the price will change our habit as the main cause of these problems.  
  
Petroleum is the basic requirement for the machine to power up. People are used to buying the petrol. This leads the people to choose the private rather than the public one. However, According to research, there is no correlation between price and solving growing traffic. So that increasing the price will not make a significant effect on their ways of using their own transportation.  
  
Now we are talking about the solution of this problem. The one that could be effective is serving public transportation to public. Using public transportation will effectively decrease the number of congestions level in some cities. Also, survey proves that if the transportation is fast, secure, and easy, almost 85 percent of respondents are ready to use the public transportation. If this research is true, then it can make a tremendous effect to solve the problem known that hard to be solved all time.  
  
All in all, providing the mass transportation and improving it are the way that can be adopted to overcome the traffic congestion and pollutions problems. Rising the price of petrol will not effectively solve the problem because, according to research, there is no correlation between price and using transportation. Using public transportation will significantly reduce the problem.  
  
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Hi My Ivan, these are my thought towards your essay  
  
1. between **price**and**solving growing traffic**  
[ i think you are not paralleling the same thing ; you paralleled noun and verbs. it would be better if you change it to noun and noun "...between The Price of petrol and The growing traffic solution ]  
  
2. So that [you need comma here] increasing the price ...  
3. the number of ~~congestions~~congestion levels in some cities..  
[ congestion is an uncountable noun]  
4. providing the mass transportation and improving it  
[ personally, it wold be better if you write **"providing and improving the mass transportation"**, but it depends on your writing style]  
5. ... improving it are the ways that..  
6. ..between **price**and**using transportation**...  
[not parallel, **between the price and the transportation usage** would be better]  
  
Mr Ivan, personally, in this essay, you should explain the idea more, you have good ideas on your both body paragraph but it does not explained well. Honestly, in some sentences, i found it difficult to understand what the sentences mean, for example *"However, I briefly disagree the price will change our habit as the main cause of these problems"*.  
  
here are my suggestion  
1. be careful with countable and uncountable noun  
2. be careful with parallel structure  
  
i hope it will be useful, thanks and GoodLuck Mr Ivan
There are three pie charts illustrate the changes in yearly cost of a certain UK's school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Overall, it can clearly be seen that teacher's remuneration became the highest aspects while assurance had the lowest percentage over 20 years.  
  
In general view, most of features have fluctuation trend because they did not stable. Schoolmasters and Schoolmistress' salaries, which became the highest spending rise from 40 percent in 1981 to 50 percent in 1991 but fell by 5 percent in 2001. It had the same pattern with resources, for example books, that started from 15 percent in the first year, then moved upwards into 20 percent and finally deteriorated sufficiently into 9 percent. Another unstable trend was displayed by furniture and equipment, but the difference was it increased in the second year.  
  
Furthermore, there are some data that increase slightly in the two decades. It was an insurance cost that had very little change from 2 percent in the beginning, change slightly into 3% in the middle, and in the last grew to 8%. In contrast, other worker salaries were felt moderately from 28 percent in the first decade to 15 percent in the last.  
  
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**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.  
To what extent do you agree or disagree?  
What other measures do you think might be effective?**  
  
Throughout these days, traffic congestion has been the main problem in the city and it makes the amount of pollution rate is increasing. However, in my opinion, I agree that the price of oil can affect the number of transportation in the street and I am sure that there are the other solutions to face these problems.  
  
Oil is the most significant thing for vehicles to operate. The prices of oil is higher than before, drivers tend to use public transportation. But, some people still drive a car because they want to arrive of their destination quickly. That is only the minority of people and the fact say that people do not want to buy gasoline which has high price and it will decrease the rate of pollution in the street. For instance, there was a sharp decrease in the number of vehicles in the street because the government made a rule to increase the price of oil twice in 2005. However, I agree that lowering of prices the way how to reduce pollution and traffic congestion while there are many solutions that can solve this problem.  
  
Using public transportation is one of the solutions to decrease pollution in the city. But, the government needs to fix the public transportation that makes it faster and more comfortable for people to use. Another solution is that cars need to pay off the cross to some streets. The driver will think again if they have to pay every crossing the street. For instance, Electronic Road Price (ERP) is implemented by Indonesian government in protocol way. It has reduced 25 percent of cars in the street. The consequence is that pollution will decrease as well. However, many ways solve this problem in the street.  
  
To sum up, I totally agree that the price of oil can handle the number of vehicles and lowering the pollution while these other solutions still can be implemented. In my opinion, this solution can be reality if the government is very serious to fix the problem.
**This three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**  
  
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of total school spending each year during three decades selected (1981, 1991, and 2001). Overall, the outlay of teachers' wages was the highest percentage throughout the year, whereas insurance was the lowest expenditure.  
  
Spending proportion breaks the teachers' salaries as the highest one when it comes to almost a half of school outlay in the three years given. The second place was addressed to salaries of workers except teachers in the first two years, 28 percent and 22 percent respectively. However, spending for furniture and equipment in the following years overtook the previous second highest position.  
  
Apart from previous comparison, expenditure for school resources saw a five-percent increase in 1991, yet in the next period school only spent 9 percent of budget to buy books. Interestingly, although insurance outlay was the lowest percentages all of period, there was a significant uptrend from year to year.  
  
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**This three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.  
  
Writing Task 1**  
  
These pie charts illustrate the total outcome of school in particular sections in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Overall, the most of school fund was used for teachers salaries while the least was used for insurance during these periods.  
  
The proportion of teacher salaries stood at 40% in 1981. There had been an incline of 10 percent In 1991 and if it sector compares with the same sector in other years, this year had the greatest percentage. Then, it followed by a slight decrease to 45 percent in 2001. The same fluctuation also happened in resources category which stood at 15 percent in 1981. After that, it reached the peaked at one-fifth in 1991 and dropped slightly to 9% in 2001.  
  
In 1981, there was 28% of school spending in other worker salaries. It hits the bottomed at 15% in 2001. School outcome for furniture and equipment had the least proportion only 5% in 1991. Lastly, for insurance sector just spent a little number during three year periods.  
  
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Hi there.. Your writing is great but there are some correction to make it better.  
  
insurance during these periods . --> which periods ? It's better to mention which period you are refering to  
  
if ~~it~~ (that ) sector compares  
  
After that, it reached ~~the~~ (a ) peaked at one-fifth in 1991  
  
Lastly, ~~for~~ insurance sector ...  
  
Thanks.
**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.  
To what extent do you agree or disagree?  
What other measures do you think might be effective?**  
  
Increasing the number of people causes rising of the percentage of transportation people in the several countries or cities. This problem can make grow up dramatically of traffic and pollution in some areas. People argue that, one of the best methods to solve this problem is increase the price of petrol. Based on this situation, I disagree about this statements, I think there are another way to solve this problem.  
  
Traffic and pollution problems are increase every year. The governments have done several ways to decrease this problem. One of method which was be doing by government is increasing the price of petrol. And people said, this was the best way to solve traffic and pollution. But I think there was important way to decline that problem, which were decreasing of driving car by one person for one car or riding a motorcycle by one people.  
  
Making the price of petrol highest is not best way, it is just have small influence if compare with socialization and a ban on using vehicles by one person to one transportation. It will cause the number of transportation do not grow up and make traffic and pollution less. If just make price of petrol more expensive than before, it just will make the price accommodation, stuff and people need are greater than ever.  
  
All in all, making the price petrol is higher than before do not best way to decrease of traffic and pollution problem. But forbid people driving or riding vehicles one by one is the best way.
Hello,  
  
... percentage of transportation ~~people~~ in the several ...  
... about this statements,I think there are another way to solve this problem.《 it is better if you emphasize and write your idea here to continue your disagreement  
  
Traffic and pollution problems are increase (increasing ) every year.  
... be doing by governmentis (WAS) increasing the price of petrol. And people said (that) this was the best way to solve traffic and pollution. But I think there was(IS) important way to (...), which wereare decreasing of driving (...) motorcycle by one ~~people~~person .  
  
Making the price of petrol highestimproving the price of petrol is not best way,(it is better to put fullstop here) it is just have.  
  
If just make price of petrol more ...《 ( what is your solution? If you do not agree, you must give your solution )  
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All in all, making the price petrol is higher than before do not best way to decrease of traffic and pollution problem. But forbid people driving or riding vehicles one by one is the best way.  
  
Gluck;)
Hi, I want to make some comments  
  
1. Increasing the number of people ~~causes~~cause rising of the percentage  
After the numer of is followed by plural verb. Hence, 'causes' should be replaced by 'cause'  
  
2.This problem can make dramatically~~grow~~growing up ~~dramatically~~~~of~~ traffic and pollution in some areas  
you can use adverb 'dramaticall' before verb and 'grow' should be made 'growing' to avoid double verb and it is better for you to delete 'of'  
  
3. I think there are ~~another~~the other~~way~~ways to solve this problem  
In the question, you have to give more than solutions, so in this thesis statement you need mention two for minimum solutions. So I change 'another way' into 'the other ways' to make it plural.  
  
Thanks  
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