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***Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.  
  
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion***  
  
Your feedback will really help to improve my essay ^,^  
  
It is true that citizens have unfit the way of life in modern era which increases the number of people who died because of eating unhealthy meals. Some people believe that advanced technology give easy way to obtain fast food everywhere. Otherwise, others think a lot of method for staying fit today and it depends on the people commitment to make an effort for a healthy lifestyle.  
  
To begin with, an unhealthy lifestyle becomes a particular of serious issue nowadays. And some people think that it is quite hard to eat fresh food or do physical movement in new world. Moreover, a period of life in advanced technology gives plenty of facilities such as, delivery food by fast food restaurant and eCommerce meals online. And these are easy way to have health problems and make human lazy to go outside. Furthermore, another facility from new innovation also make people spending much time in front of TV, Smartphone and computer, so they are less by working out in a gym and outdoor activities.  
  
Nowadays, a healthy lifestyle has become an essential thing for people who expect to live longer and healthy. And others people argue that there are several ways to stay fit such as, cut down on unhealthy foods, make an effort to do exercise every twice a week frequently and increase fruits and vegetable intake regularly. However, people who prefer to keep fit in lifestyle have to commits with themselves to avoid unhealthy lifestyle.  
  
To sum up, it is easy to have a healthy lifestyle in modern era by eating balance nutrition, eliminate junk food and doing exercise as long as the people can commits with these activities but in my experience there are many ways to have a fit body and healthy mind such as less stress, sleep well at night and do yoga at midnight. It might be very useful to solve health problems.
Hi Eve01.  
It is my pleasure to give you some correction  
  
It is true that citizens have unfit (Put noun because fit is adjective, example, unfit condition) the way of life in modern era  
  
Some people believe that advanced technology ~~give~~givesan easy way  
  
~~And~~ (it is better not to use AND in the first of sentence. it will be great if you write in addition or furthermore ) some people think that (...) eat fresh food or to do physical movement in ~~new world~~ (it is too wide. much better you replace it by their daily activity .  
  
Best regard
Hi Eva, first of all, as I go through your essay, I believe you have made a well managed answer to the task at hand, you have a direct response and you did what was asked of you to write. In general, you have pointed each side of the puzzle that made your conclusion strong. Having said that, I do agree that, nowadays, it's getting tougher to be healthy, there are several factors that gets your mind off of eating healthy and living healthy, however, it is always your will that matters in the end, your choice to be healthy and be fit in every way possible.  
  
Moreover, as much as I believe your essay has a very positive result and highlighted the necessary points to address the prompt, I have a few suggestions to enhance your essay.  
  
Conclusion  
- in this modern era by eating balance nutrition,  
- ~~the people~~you can commit~~s with these~~  
- to the activities ~~but~~, however, in  
- to ~~have a~~be fit ~~body~~ and healthy  
- ~~mind such as~~by observing less stress, sleeping well at night  
- ~~and do yoga at midnight. It might be very useful to~~ solve health problems as soon as they arise or better yet prevent them, as they say, prevention is better than cure .  
  
I hope the above remarks help in your revision.
**Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them**?  
  
Along with the development of advertisement, more and more effect is brought to consumer attention, one of which is a competition of companies. Personally, I believe that advertisement of contending companies are dangerous for consumers who are encouraged to spend money without thinking.  
  
No one could neglect the fact that consumers waste their money on some eye-catching products of companies which are broadcasted on the different way such as television program, and so forth do not need for daily life. This is because many companies promote buyers to use their products and services by disseminating information on marketing campaigns, these companies can gain high profits in advertising commercials. For instance, when viewers watch a movie, they may be attended on slogans which move on the screen represent the benefit of goods. The audience just is affected to spend much money on buying some products, but they aware that there are unnecessary goods.  
  
Despite hard to finding method, the government should protect their citizen from harmful advertisements. Hazardously advertising televisions programs, poster all of which inform prohibit goods such as alcohol and cigarette should be restricted, especially teenager. Additionally, customers have to subscribe on necessary introduction as well as cannot buy some strange products. However, parents should adopt their child and protect them from too much exposure to advertising.  
  
In conclusion, it is undeniable that influent advertisements become more and more important for human life. Nonetheless, customers waste too much money to obtain some goods and services, and children should be promoted to pay much money
Hi Hanryhyunh..  
you are excellent writer, but i found some mistakes. Lemme show you  
  
..., more and more effect ~~is~~ brought attention to consumer ~~attention~~ , one of (?) which is a competition of companies  
  
... too much exposure ~~to~~from advertising.  
  
In conclusion, it is undeniable that ~~influen~~influenceof advertisements become ~~more and more important~~essential for human life  
  
... obtain some goods and services, and children should be promoted to pay much money  
make it clear.  
  
Good job mate!
Hi Toan, kindly find additional modifications for your essay.  
  
- brought to consumers attention,  
- one of which is ~~a~~the competition of companies.  
- of ~~contending~~rival companies are dangerous  
  
- No one ~~could~~should neglect the  
- products ~~of companies which~~that are broadcasted  
- ~~on the~~in different ways such  
  
- they ~~may be attended on~~can flash slogans  
- ~~which~~that moves on the  
- screen that represents the  
- benefits of the goods.  
  
- Despite hard to find~~ing~~ methods ,  
- ~~Hazardously~~Negative advertising on televisions programs,  
- post~~er all of which inform~~ prohibited goods  
  
- In conclusion, it is undeniable that the~~influent~~influence of advertisements  
- should be ~~promoted to pay much money~~kept away from this harmful and negative advertisements.  
  
There you have it Toan, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision, for future writing reference, make sure that you be cautious on the correct form of the words that you incorporate in your essay.
At the first time in the history of fitness and health magazines in the U.S, the cover star of the Women's Running Magazine is wearing hijab. It becomes a hot issue in this week. The people wonder who this outstanding woman is, and the cover star is Rahaf Khatib. She is a mother of three kids who has competed in two triathlons and countless half marathons. She have several uniques experiences as athlete who wears hijab. Even, at the first race, she was asked lots of questions about her performance. Don't you get hot? This is the most favorite questions that she had. If it is hot outside, you are going to be warm regardless! She answered it calmly. Although it is not common view in United States, However, she stated that her running community has been welcoming her nicely. In addition, she revealed her feeling to Women's Running that she are proud to be the cover of that magazine. Moreover, she want to show to the world, especially to her parents and children and she convinced it is meant that her sweat, tears, and training are worth it.
Hi Iedha01..  
Let me give you some advice..  
  
....  
... this outstanding woman is, and ~~the cover star~~she is Rahaf Khatib.  
... three kids who ~~has~~had competed in two triathlons ...  
She ~~have~~had several uniques experiences ...  
... revealed her feeling ~~to Women's Running~~ that she ~~are proud~~proud to be the cover ~~of that magazine~~star of the Women's Running Magazine . Moreover, she ~~want~~ wants to show to (...) and children ~~and she convinced it is meant~~ that her sweat, tear, and training are worth ~~it~~ .  
  
good job. I hope It could be useful.
**TED Summary : The world's english mania**  
  
The topic for this is mania. Many aspect people get form Media. People can see the news update which are they love about something, it can make people feel crying and screaming. There are several ways to express the something people like, which are supporters from football offer their favourite clubs.  
  
In addition, the other thing which are mania about religion. Make people close enough to God. For example, mania can be good, also can be endanger also can be deathly.  
  
The world has many mania about something which are learning english, listening chinese student practice their english by screaming to something.  
How many people learning english worldwide?  
2 billion of them, at least in America, India and Southern East Asia. Most of all in China. If you live in china that you must studied from 3 grade. In the future china will be the largest english speaking country.  
  
Why english?  
On othe hand, there are many aspect which are opportunity for better life, a job, to be able the favourit school. The people in china studied 12 a day for three years. 25% of their grade is based on english language. Intensity of learning english is an almost In the city.  
  
However, english mania affected which are good or bad, english is world second languages part of the wider conversation, a global conversation which are climate change,hunger disease and universal language. English is language of problem solving because it can communicate and unify with the others. English represent hope for better future.
Many aspects people get form Media  
  
People can see the news update ...  
=>People can read the latest news about what they are interest in.  
  
There are several ways to express ~~the~~ something people like  
  
which are supporters from football ...  
=>such as what football supporters do due to their love to the favorite clubs.  
  
the other thingS which are mania about religion.  
  
I'M REALLY SORRY TO SAY THAT YOU HAVE MADE A LOT OF MISTAKES RELATED TO BASIC GRAMMAR, PLEASE PAY MORE ATTENTIONS TO DEAL WITH IT.
hi dika ^,^  
  
your summary is good enough but let me give some advises and i hope it helps  
  
>> marks your spelling ( favourite ; favorite, english ; English , chinese; Chinese (use capital letter)  
>> to begin with summary video you can use >> according to the speaker, based on the video or mention the name of speaker  
  
>> better to not put questions in summary but write the content  
  
~~On othe hand~~On the other hand , there are many aspects which ~~are~~have opportunities for better life, a job~~,~~and to be able chosen the favourit school.  
  
keep writing
Hi Andika, as I go through your essay, I believe there's something wrong with how you understood the TED talk that you are trying to summarize. As far as I recall, this particular talk is focused on hoe the English language took off and created such a mania that every single person in the world would like to learn and speak the language.  
  
Now, there is some truth to your summary, the part where you talk about or enumerated countries where the language originated and how it spread is an absolute truth. The English language has taken the world for as long as I can remember, it is dubbed as the universal language, a language where everybody understands everybody and share the same perspective and expression. Nonetheless, it is the language that brought people together and unfortunately enough, the same language that sometimes can break people apart due to several factors such as different views and different understanding to certain circumstances in life.  
  
Overall, it's quiet a confusing summary, there's quiet a lot of changes to be made, however, they can be fixed and modified and I hope the above insights helped you in your revision.
Some people find difficult ways in order to post their pictures in social media. This situation happen because they lack of knowledge in taking picture.  
  
Smartphone cameras can give a great picture depend on user. There are a number of common problems of bad quality of the images, such as autofocus, flash, and zoom digital. However, these problems are not longer as long as the user know the trick to solve it.  
  
This article will give you tips to become expert camerist. First, make more effort in manual focus and try focusing on different parts of the screen. Second, avoid to use flash and try in normal light scenario, because the result will be more shiny and clear. Third, using digital zoom will give less focus on your picture, just move closer to the subject and take it naturally.  
  
Finally, all of these tips will make you able to take picture like professional, and all in all skill of editing is turning point of the images. Giving more touch of filter and you will ready to post it on your social media.
hai gian  
it is a great topic  
I have some suggestions for you  
  
Some people find difficult ways in [...] lack of knowledge in taking picture. <<<< **better to use 3 sentences**  
  
There are a ~~number~~**amount**of common problems of bad ...  
  
This article will gives you tips to become expert ~~camerist~~**<<<< I think "photograph" is better.** ]  
  
The f irst, make more effort in manual ...  
  
... tips will makes you able to take picture ...  
... you will ready to post it on ~~your~~ social media.  
  
I think it is enough  
thank you
Hello Giansy, your writing is excellent, however, I suggest some suitable words which can be used to produce well sentences. Those words are put on the second paragraph showed below:  
  
"Smartphone cameras can give a great ... "  
  
"Smartphone cameras can produce a great photograph, but it depends on how user uses that sophisticated technology. Using such cell phone camera is that indeed the user cannot be separated by many common problems which occur due to bad quality of the images such as the auto-focus, flash, and zoom digital. The tricks in operating that technology are believed as methods of solving the mentioned problems and it can be coped with an agility of photographer in utilizing that camera. "  
  
Thanks
***Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to healthy and fit if they want to be.  
  
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.***  
  
In modern era, there are many ways to keep body healthy. It depend on the people who want to stay fit. For example, in the office peoples can do some exercise at the free time. Although the others prefer to stay for doing nothing.  
  
The office workers have little time because of their job in every day. It can effect for their healthy that they just sitting every time. In addition, they also find the fast food rather than nutrition foods, because the fast food more delicious than healthy foods. The taste is salty. Subsequently, they prefer using escalator than stairs. It make their body not produce sweat because they do less activities. Next, people use their cars instead of walking to arrive in the work office.  
  
In other hand, employee can use their separate time to do many exercise. It can effect for their healthy nd focus. However, They can bring packed meal which are the nutrition foods, such as fresh fruits and vegetables that contain less oil and flavourin. Next, they can go to sport centre and make schedule to exercise because it is important. Although, it is look harder but if the people do the activities regularly, they can keep their body healthy. In addition, they can choose to walk instead using vehicle because it make their body be active.  
  
Recently, i think many peoples have plan about their activity which are doing exercise but in fact they just need good start. If people can do it regularly, they can want to do it again.  
  
In conclusion, for being healthy it is difficult because there are many way to reach that. People just need healthy lifestyle become habit. Unfortunately, the people think it is difficult to get fit, in fact it can be very easy.
hello dika  
I have some suggestions for you  
I hope it helps  
  
**1. reduction using subject pronoun in body 1 and 2****2. I think using technology is suitable than talking about occupation**  
... exercise at the free time,a lthough the others prefer to stay for doing nothing.**(give your position about this task)**  
  
It can effect ~~for~~on their healthy that ...  
  
The taste is salty(too short sentence) .  
  
... they can keep fit~~their body healthy~~(paraphrase) .  
  
Recently, ~~i~~**I** <<< **capital** think many people~~s~~ have plan (...) which are doing exercise, but in fact they ...  
  
... there are many ways to reach that.  
  
be careful out of topic bro  
keep writing  
thanks
Hi Andika08. It is nice to read your writing but I have some suggestions for you  
  
It depends on the people who ...  
... in the office people~~s~~ can do some ...  
  
It can ~~effect~~ affect for their healthy that ...  
  
It can ~~effect~~ affect for their healthy nd focus.  
  
Although, it ~~is~~ looks harder but if the people ...  
  
Recently, i think many people~~s~~ have plan about their activity which ~~are~~is doing exercise but ...  
  
Keep writing. Best regard
The bar chart describes the amount of UK University students who studying Computer Science during 2 years between 2010 and 2012. Overall, both British and International students, the proportion of men has fallen and rose while women shows that it increased constantly.  
  
The diagram of British home students shows that the men was stood at 48 students in 2010 and then plunged to 23 students in 2011. However, it was increased steadily to 43 students in 2012. By contrast, side, the number of women was increased gradually during three years from 35 students in 2010 to 45 students in 2012.  
  
On the other side, International students highlight that the total number of men rose from 20 students in 2010. Therefore, it increased dramatically from 23 students in 2011 to 38 students in 2012. Besides, the proportion of women increased steadily within the three years from 13 students in 2010 to 20 students in 2012.  
  
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Hi Ucha, it is nice to read your writing but here is some suggestions for you  
  
... shows that the men ~~was~~ stood at 48 students in ...  
However, it ~~was~~ increased steadily to ...  
... the number of women ~~was~~ increased gradually during ...  
  
ťťI do not think that you wish to use passive voice thought your first and last paragraph show it does not. Be careful.  
  
Keep writing. Best regard.
Hi Ucha MSN  
Let me give you some advice..  
....  
However, it ~~was~~ increased steadily to 43 ...  
... the number of women ~~was~~ increased gradually during three years from 35 ...*you could change it : from 35 to 45 students during three years since 2010 until 2012*  
  
On the other side,International students highlight ...you could change it : The highlight of International male students rose from 20 students in 2010.  
... of women increased steadily withinthe three yearsyou could change it : the whole perod from 13 students in 2010 to 20 students in 2012.  
  
Good Job, I hope it could be useful..
It is the Susan O'Keefe's journey with her husband for Nat Geo Expeditions. they have visited the Canadian Rockies. The trip have started from Calgary to Vancouver. In that spot they made plenty of stops along the way, including Banff and Jasper National Parks and Whistler and Victoria, British Columbia for 12 days.  
  
First, they spent time at Elaho-Squamish River with their favorite activity which is water rafting. They felt amazing sensation when they should traverse terrain otherwise inaccessible way. This is not wasted journey because they got the impressive views of the world's most glaciated mountain range. Not only throwing the river but also climbing up a rock ledge and jumping into a pool of chilly blue water that they did it.  
  
In the beautiful Lake Louise in Banff National Park, they knew about uniquely colorless lake with snowcapped peaks landscaping the scent of fresh forest pine. In that spot there is historical place as called as Lake Agnes Tea House that provide good tasted hot tea and best homemade desserts. Hiking in the Athabasca Glacier is the great choice. It is not hard to see Canadian wildlife in that place, such as mountain goats, caribou, grizzly bears, wolves, moose, and so on.  
  
At the night they tried to watch incredible late sunset and stargaze in Miette Hot Spring which is still one area with Jasper National Park that is considered the second largest dark sky preserve in the world and hosts of stargazing events.  
  
In western coast of Vancouver Island, they took a long coastal hike with accompanied by best landscape of Olympic Peninsula, revealing blue skies, and sparkling Pacific water. As travel cover, they visited Victoria which rich about traditional cultural attraction and mouth-watering seafood cuisine.  
  
From mountain peaks to massive glaciers and Tiffany blue lakes, there was spectacular scenery everywhere they looked, and remarkable experience for them.
Hi Rasedasda..  
You can deliver well your summary, but i found some mistakes. lemme show you  
  
It is ~~the~~ Susan O'Keefe's journey with her ...  
do not use article  
  
In that spot there is historical place (...) Tea House that provide good tasted hot tea ...  
pay attention to verb that you use in one sentence.  
  
At the night they watched~~tried to watch~~ incredible ~~late~~ sunset and stargaze in Miette Hot Spring ~~which is still one~~where it same areas with Jasper National Park that is ...
Hi Asda, I believe this is the first review I will do for your essay and right off the bat, I must say that this summary is full of adjectives that helped describe in very fine details what is in the story and this summary also featured all there is to know and understand in order to discover the destination.  
  
Overall, as much as the ideas and information help elaborate the sense that you are trying to convey to your readers, the adjectives, verbs as well as the minor details such as the linking verbs and stand alone phrases are great addition to your essay and this is what you did in your summary essay. You made sure that all the points and contents are covered to create that substance needed for your essay.  
  
What else is there is for you to keep writing, though I know that your essay can still be enhanced, I believe it comes in time and practice of course. Keep writing.