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Exploring stories about the past of their accommodation is becoming increasingly popular for many people in some nations. This essay will examine the two main causes of this trend, including estimating the value of their houses and satisfying their curiosity as well as discuss the ways they do it.  
  
There are two major reasons that can explain the interest of some people in figuring out what happened to their houses in the past. Evaluating these houses should be considered the first reason, which means that the life of the previous owners has an impact on the value of the house. In Vietnam, for instance, if the former owners sell a house where they are living and move to a better area, the buyers will be willing to pay a larger amount of money than those left by people, who are dead or diseased. Another reason is that researching for the stories of the building is a simple and interesting way to excite the curiosity of some people. By doing this, these people may know more about their houses and, sometimes, love the place they are living in more.  
  
There are several ways that can help people know more about their living area. Firstly, due to the rapid popularity of technology development, today's people can easily research the history of their places through a gadget equipped with an Internet connection. Secondly, the previous owners are the ones who have the most knowledge about this place; therefore, people can get lots of information from them. Finally, the neighborhoods are also the sources of a couple of stories that sellers do not want people to be informed about.  
  
In conclusion, curiosity and evaluation are the two root causes for people's interest in the historical information of the place they live. Moreover, there are three main sources that help these people to do this.
**PROMPT:  
## THE CHART SHOWS EXPECTED CITY VISITS BY COUNTRY OF ORIGIN FOR 2018 (THOUSAND/YEAR)**  
  
The given chart gives information about the travelling tendency to 4 countries of people in the USA, Canada and Mexico in the year 2018.  
Overall, Marid is anticipated to be the most well-known tourist destination, on the contrary, the lowest figure belonged to Liverpool. It is also apparent that there will be a significant disparity in the number of travelers to the capital of France.  
  
According to the current predictions, there will be numerous American visitors in Madrid(100 thousand), compared to the figure for Canadian and Mexican, with 80 thousand and nearly 70 thousand respectively. Similarly, the number of Americans having a trip to Liverpool is likely to stand at somewhere in the vicinity of 50 thousand, which is double and triple as much as the quantity of Canada and Mexico.  
  
Looking at the graph more detail, the year 2008 is estimated to witness an equal number of citizens in these 3 countries travelling to Paris (above 600 thousand). Meanwhile, the figure for Rome is predicted to have the biggest difference among 3 nations, to be specific, there will be approximately 80 thousand American residents compared with just 50 thousand and 20 thousand visitors from Canada and Mexico respectively.  
  
Thank you for your help!  
  
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The given chart  
What type of chart? Specific image indicators add clarity to the presentation. It helps with a better understanding of the up and coming comparison report.  
  
4 countries  
Summarized as? The summary overview must always give the important data in run-down form. The reader relies on this for quick reference clarity.  
  
It is also apparent  
Unnecessary. The immediate important information pertain to measurement highs and lows. Medians are best used as comparison markers in the report itself.  
  
\* Missing are the measurement type and comparison basis ( measured for the whole year) to complete the summary paragraph.  
  
Avoid presenting numerical data in parenthesis when it is not done for the other measurement presentations. Uniformly compare the information instead.
*Topic:  
**Some people think that hard work and determination bring success. Others think other factors such as money and good appearance are more important.***  
## Discuss both views and give your opinion.[/i]

  
  
Essay:  
It is true that hard work and determination are two key factors to get success in life, whereas, some people do believe that money and good appearance play more important roles. While all these are necessary, I would strongly agree that hard work is definitely the most essential factor for those who wish to achieve success.  
  
On the one hand, it is undoubtledy that things like money, wealth and smart appearance are considered to be vital in bringing success at work as well as in daily life.  
  
Firstly, jobs such as bank officers or flight attendants do require people with good-looking outward aspects such as smart face, beautiful smile or the average height. There is an online survey conducted by students in the University of Economics Ho Chi Minh city that people with good appearance tend to have more job opportunities than people who do not. Besides, money or wealthy is also a vital factor in order to \*\*get a head in life.\*\* Pretending that you are a start-up, your priority now is marketing your business to potential partners as well as target customers. Without money, it seems to be extremely difficult to \*\*develop contacts\*\* with rich and influential people or hiring KOLs (Key Opinion Leaders) and famous people to advertise your brand.  
  
On the other hand, comparing to money and appearance, hard work and determination are so far the most value elements in seeking for success and recognition.  
  
There is one famous sentence :"Genius only has 1% talent, 99% is hard work". If you have 100$ but no dedication and no laboriousness, that 100$ will be gone. However, if you have 10$ but 100% hard work and studiousness, you will raise that 10$ to 100$ and even 100 million dollars.  
  
From a perspective of the employers, the employees with good and hard-working performances will obviously have more promotion opportunities and high wages comparing to others.  
  
In conclusion, as money and smart appearance are so precious in modern world, hard work is, in my opinion, the most important.
It is true  
This creates a problem with the orginal topic rephrasing. There is no question being asked of the writer in terms of statement veracity. Such a response is therefore, misplaced in the presentation. As this is most likely the personal opinion of the author, such a belief should be witten into the thesis response instead. That is, it must be integrated into the personal opinion section of the paragraph.Its current placement alters the given topic, forcing points reduction for the paragraph.  
  
On the one hand  
On the other hand  
Stand- alone sentence presentations will not add to the score as these do not follow the paragraph presentation requirements. Blend these points of new into the actual reasoning paragraphs.  
  
There is one famous sentence  
Unless you can explain the relevance of this to the public opinion, it adds confusion rather than clarity to the statement.
## Analysis of The bar chart

  
  
The bar chart illustrates the number of people who were employed in three different sectors of the economy in the UK. The graph is calibrated in the percentage of 11- year period.  
  
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that both public and self-employed sectors had upward trends over time whereas significant downward trends can be seen in the private sector.  
  
Regarding the employment rate of the private sector, nearly 50% of the population was working in private sectors in 2000 but then gradually declined to just under 30% in 2008. Then employment rate hit the trough in 2010 and became the least employed sector of the year compared to other fields.  
  
As for the public section, the percentage of employment reached at 40 in the first three years and inclined to nearly 50% in 2003. Despite having slight fluctuation, the figure hit the peak at over 50 per cent. Similarly, if we look at the self-employed sector, under 20 per cent of people worked in this field in the first 2 years and it roughly fluctuated and stabled at estimately 30 percent in 2010.  
  
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bar chart  
Incorrect image identifier. The image is a line graph. Points will be deducted for summary image inaccuracy.  
  
11- year period.  
From when to when? The summary overview is becoming less accurate with every sentence written and presented.  
  
what stands out from the graph  
Coherence issue in relation to the image identifier. This will cause several preliminary scoring deductions. Use a uniform image identifier. Preciseness is key to avoiding deductions in a Task 1 essay.  
  
but then gradually  
Should be presented as a seperate idea in the paragraph to help differentiate the information. A seperate sentence can be used to add cohesiveness to the report.  
  
Similarly  
There is nothing similar about the comparison data Wrong word usage. There is no proper comparison point presented.
**Topic: Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary.**  
## Do you agree or disagree?

  
  
The advancement of technology in recent decades has digitalized almost every human activity. In the light of this, many argue that libraries are outdated, and therefore, unfit for the demanding needs of the modern world. While I agree that the Internet is a powerful tool when it comes to information provision, I believe that libraries have their own importance in providing resources.  
  
Admittedly, there are several reasons why people are in favor of searching information online over the traditional method of going to libraries. Firstly, in terms of time efficiency, the Internet allows us to access information at any time when it is convenient while libraries are only open for a certain number of hours a day and several days a week. People can also save a huge amount of time traveling as everything now is just one click away with the availability of online searching tools. Furthermore, the Internet is a reservoir of knowledge that is greater than any physical library, and it is getting updated every second. Therefore, to those who just need to get information in the fastest and easiest way, the Internet should be enough.  
  
However, I believe that physical libraries still have special features that online sources can never replace. One of the key objectives of libraries is that it provides spaces which are specialized for studying. Particularly, every library has an academic environment with a quiet ambiance and less distraction to encourage deep concentration. This explains why many students still go to libraries to prepare for exams these days. In addition, people can always rest assured with the accuracy of the information they collected from libraries as books before being displaced in there have undergone strict processes of censoring by the ministry of education, and thus, it can be used officially for academic purposes or even scientific research.  
  
In conclusion, although there are more and more alternative ways to attain information in this days and ages, I contend that libraries will still exist in the future for its unique value.
While I agree that ...I believe that libraries have their own importance in providing resources.  
The opinion of the writer is unclear. Do you agree or disagree? The response can only support one opinion. As this is not an extent statement, a deque based response cannot be used. The essay has failed at this point. A passing preliminary score cannot be awarded due to a lack of opinion clarity as indicated in the discussion qquestion. The second failure reason is the way the response is deemed incorrect based on the required answer format.  
  
However  
Nope. The essay score will be based on a single - reason. The problem, is that there is no clear opinion provided. The essay is not headed towards a passing mark at this point.
***Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose a career path they like.***  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  
  
It is widely admissible that children should not be imposed on which career path they are going to follow. Some parents do not agree with this opinion due to the fact that they know their children best. However, I totally believe that it is student's freedom to decide their own college majors and occupational choices.  
  
To begin with, various teenagers have distinctive abilities. A number of them may have a head for numbers, statistics or figures, on the contrary others can be good at drawing, singing or dancing. Sometimes these aptitudes happen to appear at an early age among juveniles, for most cases they are not instantly recognizable though until they enter high schools. With busy work schedules, parents barely have time to pay much attention to their children, therefore, it is only the children who know explicitly about their strengths and weaknesses. Furthermore, parents are frequently affected by old-fashioned conceptions, especially those coming from Asian countries like China, Korea, Vietnam or Japan. They want their offspring to fit the conventional stereotype of a doctor, a teacher or an engineer. This will have an adverse effect on the teenagers in light of the fact that not everyone is cut out for these careers, they can end up becoming insecure about themselves. Each individual has a field that they are confident in and only them will know what their potentials and values are.  
  
Besides, every child has its own interest and passion. Doing something you like is always more inspiring and appealing than something you dislike. Consistency is a key to success, consequently if someone feels unmotivated about the vocations they are doing, how can they stick to it and give their best performance? A recent survey has shown that over 30 percent of workers in the US left their current office as they want to start over with their favorite ones. This is a wake-up call for all parents as jumping from one job to another is not ideal since anyone can possibly lose the perfect opportunity to move up the career ladder.  
  
In conclusion, I would say desire and talent play a crucial role in everyone's success. That's why every father and mother ought to be more open-minded and accept their children's choices.  
  
Please give feedbacks on my writing. I would appreciate it.
due to the fact that they know their children best.  
This is a topic reason deviation. It is not supported in the orginal statement. It has altered the original topic proposal because the writer chose to provide a prisonal opinion in the restatement. By beginning the reasoning discussion too early, he has forced a restatement failure, even as the opinion placement is correct in format. The first paragraph may have difficulty achieving a passing consideration in the preliminary stage.  
  
how can they stick to it and give their best performance?  
Avoid rhetorical questions such as these. The reason stating a response to the qquestion creates a score lowering topic alteration. Stick to related statements instead.  
  
A recent survey  
To make this seem less researched, use the word "public" since researched data cannot be cited in the presentation.
***The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.  
## Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.***  
  
The provided bar graph demonstrates the data on the occupation of graduated and post-graduate students who didn't work full-time after finishing college in the UK in 2008.  
  
Overall, it is clear that a minority of UK graduates and postgraduates decided to go on further study. Additionally, the number of graduates seen in the chart was far more than the figure for postgraduates.  
  
The number of graduates who chose to pursue their higher education topped the table at 29 665 students, while the opposite was true for the figure for volunteer work, with only 3500 graduates participating. Graduated students taking temporary jobs got the number of 17 735, compared to 16 235 graduates being unemployed.  
  
Similarly, the data on students taking part in the further study took the lead with 2725 people, contrary to the information on volunteer work, which only obtained 345 postgraduates. Furthermore, 2345 post-graduate students chose part-time jobs, which was much higher than the number of unemployed, 1625 people.  
  
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The provided bar graph  
Differentiate between their bar graphs. Indicate the content for each and offer 2 trending sentences. One for each image. Group the information by mage representation. The presentation seperation is necessary due to the number of images and differing content.  
  
Paragraph clarity is an issue in the presentation. Every paragraph presents an idea series in every sentence. This is a presentation that runs counter to the clarity requirement of the presentation. When presented in this manner, the paragraph loses coherence, which means the cohesiveness of the presentation is affected. heate proper simple and complex sentences to avoid these run-on errors.  
  
Good report. The sentence structure can be improved though.
## Developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid

  
  
In recent years, developing nations are often financially supported by prosperous nations, however, poverty still remain.Therefore, it has been an increasingly argument for trying alternative solutions. I completely agree with this point of view and this essay will explain why.  
  
On the one hand, there are several reasons why the financial solution is not working as many people might expect. First, since the money funded by rich countries may not be equally devided to the poor, many people will continue to live in destitution. In fact, these aids have to travel through many people and organizations before coming to people who are in need, it can not be guaranteed that this whole process is transparent and enough support will be deliver to the poor. Second, giving money to developing countries is such a temporary strategy, increasing the sense of dependence which prevent them from getting rid of poverty forever.  
  
On the other hand, there are many feasible alternatives can be taken into account to tackle this issue. First, rich nations can transfer the cutting edge technology to poor countries so they could sustain their own economy. Indeed, countries suffered from poverty are often low-tech and human resource dominates in the chain leading to low productivity compares to that of machines which are mainly used in the developed countries. If these developing nations can adopt the high-tech methods in production, the productivity will increase which eventually flourish national economy. Second, education is the key to sustainable development, therefore, prosperous nations should help poorer one in academic education as well as training qualified employees. For example, the government of developed nations such as American, UK and Australia ... should release more policies for abroad student from poor nations like financial aids, accommodation support...  
  
In conclusion, giving money to poor nations is pointless and other practical strategies such as adopting new technology from rich nations and investing more in education can potentially solve the poverty crisis.
I completely agree  
Do not exaggerate your response. Format the answer as needed or indicated in the discussion question. This is not an extent response essay so the response provided is incorrect. The format should be that off a simple agree or disagree statement. Remember that scores are deducted for incorrect response presentations.  
  
On the one hand,  
On the other hand  
The reasoning format is also not as expected. As a single opinion essay, you cannot use a discuss both opinion format. Both paragraphs need to support only the previously stated opinion. Otherwise, only the related paragraph and reasson will be scored.  
  
Seperate the concluding paragraph into at least 2 sentences composed of 40 words or more to recieve a score in this section. Do not use run- on sentences that reduce the statement clarity.
## some aspects of life that only art can tell us

  
  
In today's modern society, notwithstanding the benefit of science and technology, we are still get brilliant values from artists such as musicians, painters and writers. This essay will discuss some aspects of life that only art can tell us but science cannot.  
  
On the one side, it is clear that art focus on the beautiful side of life. It helps us to find the potential beauty, even in the most terrible thing. There are a number of things or people that we normally never pay any attention to, but for the help of art, all of them are carved in a brilliant way, therefore, it makes us all realize that each person or each thing has its own pulchritude. The short Vietnamese story "Chi Pheo", which is written by Nam Cao, illustrates that even the worst person (Chi Pheo) is also able to become kind if we show respect to him. Chi Pheo-the main  
  
character-first was the monster of his village-after he met the love of his life-he become a total gentle, kind-hearted person.  
  
On the contrary, art also unveil the dark side of the world that we are living, as a result it support us to fight for the truth. It cannot be denied that there are many social evil cases that are apparently wrong, but the victims are unable to do anything because of their social status, therefore, there are a huge load of pictures, novels, songs,etc. that are used to satirize the dark side of the society. There was a case in Japan that a Vietnamese five-year-old girl was sexual abused by a seventy years old man, who was her neighbour. Unfortunately, despite the great demand of the public that the government should give an appropriate sentence to the criminal, the crimnial is still insist on not admitting of what he has done. As a result, many journalist and artist raise the awareness of government by drawing caricatures.  
  
To conclude, despite the development of science and technology, art still plays an important role in our life in order to tell us about things that none of those modern stuffs cannot. Therefore, it is crucial to take advantage of art in a most useful way, as a result our society will gradually become better.
This essay will discuss some aspects of life that only art can tell us but science cannot.  
Kick off the discussion with a proper topic outline. The reader needs to know that you have a solid set of supporting ideas for your opinion. It will definitely add to the overall clarity of your opinion as related to the topic.  
  
The discussion topics need to be be better outlined Act can indicate anything from trash out to literature. Due to the expansive discussion scope, limit the presentation to 2 specific out forms. That way the discussion becomes targeted rather than scattered as it is now. The ideas are good but lack cohesive idea and discussion development.  
  
While sentence presentations are sometimes presented using improper grammar, the paragraphs remain understandable to the reader.