dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
**Prompt:**  
***Nowadays, families are not as close as the used to be.***  
## **What is the causes? What can be solutions for this?**

  
  
My writing: 297 words  
  
Recently, there has been a bigger gap between family members. Regardless of many efforts have been made, this is still happening in many households.There are some reasons leading to this problem, and fortunately there are also appropriate measures to fix the situation.  
  
To start with, difference between generations is the primary cause of the gap deviding families. For example, parents easily get confused, and struggle to understand their children's thoughts. Spontaneously, children also feel like their parents are incomprehensible, and keep breaking their privacy and freedom. This is how generation gap looks like, and leaving it unsolved can result in various kinds of nagative knock-on effects. Secondly, the lack of communitcation is one of the most serious culprits which is need to be fixed. It is obvious that every organization existing without sharing and communicating will be collapsed including families. Therefore, the shotage of talking and listening between members in a house can help the gap grow bigger and bigger from day to day.  
  
From my perspective, the solutions should come from both sides, or all family members together. On one hand, parents should be friends with their children in order to listen what are their problems and struggles. This is an ideal method to narrow the generation gap, and aslo to get to understand their children more deeply. On the other hand, children should try to put themselves in their parents' shoes so as to recognize difficulties and hardship parents are facing. As a result, from understanding each other, members can become more close-knit as a true family.  
  
In conclusion, the gap in families can come from many distinctive causes, but some proper approaches can be very beneficial. And the main point here is just to share, and to communicate more from both parents and children.
~~Regardless of many efforts have been made, this is still happening in many households.~~  
As this is not referenced in the original presentation, it should not be discussed in the restatement. This is a topic alteration that lowers the accuracy of restatement score.  
  
There are some reasons ... measures to fix the situation.  
You are not answering the questions. The discussion outline based on qquestion responses are missing. This paragraph does not have any questions response outline as needed to prove your logical understanding of the discussion requirements. An accurate response is needed for a proper score to be applied.  
  
communitcation  
Spelling error. Proofread and correct these to avoid vocabulary and grammar deductions.  
  
And the main  
Academic writing violation. Grammar rules dictate that " and" as a conjunction should never be used to start a sentence. This is because conjunctions are used as thought and idea connectors in a sentence.
Prompt :  
***In some countries, parents are choosing to teach children themselves at home instead of sending them to school.***  
## Do the advantages of homeschooling outweigh the disadvantages?

  
  
The trend of choosing home schooling over general education for children are getting more noticement among parents in several countries. While many wouldn't opt to such counter-intuitive and in some sense unfeasible choice, it's my believe that homeschooling  
  
Admittedly, it is true that self-education without the help of school can be challenging as well as detrimental for a student mental health. A self-education student wouldn't be able to acquire information as good as those who interpret them with a trained teacher, even with a help of their parents. Lacking exposure to friends of their age may cause some trouble with their social skill and even make them vulnerable to inappropriate influences. For example in the from of addictive substance such as drugs, alcohol or cigarreet or in a more mental terms such as mental disorders.  
  
However, the previously mentioned negatives can be considered negligible when consider homeschooling's beneficial side. An apparent advantage over traditional learning that it has is the reduction of transportation. Transporting between places for children can be both time and economically costly. It can also lurk the danger in the occurrence of day to day traffic. Study at home can eliminate all of that threats. Besides, a child by being exposed to a self learning environment can be extremely beneficial in the long run. This can be a tremendous help as they can develop a skill to learn independently from former structure. Scientifically speaking, self-learning is one of the major skill that evolve humankind from the cave man period to be a well established civilization as we are today. By the same token, a person learning by themselves is a intuitive process that get better gradually.  
  
In conclusion, I support the view that homeschooling' advantages surpass its cons. Additionally, that homeschooling is an extremely beneficial method should only be true when provided that the student is able to learn effectively and is prevented from harmful effect to their mental health.
it's my believe that homeschooling  
Complete the sentence to offer an accurate response to the question provided. The thesis statement is incomplete. Do not spend too much time and word count on the restatement and opinion presentation. Go directly to your opinion and make sure the accurate response is given.  
  
the previously mentioned negatives  
Do not over discuss. Use a comparative analysis per reason instead of per paragraph.That way the discussion stays within the written debate requirements. Debunk each negative as a positive to allow for better response format compliance.  
  
I support the view that homeschooling' advantages surpass its cons.  
This is should have been fully stated at the start as well. The restated topic is presented twice per discussion. At the start and at the end asa reminder to the reader.
## the most favored type of transportation

  
  
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of transport preference in young generation in the US, UK, France and Italy in a single year.  
  
Overall, the most favored type of transportation in most countries is car, except France. Also of note is that the proportion of young Italy people who preferred car in this year is highest, and Italy also record widest gap among the figures for motorcycle and two other vehicles.  
  
Regarding Italy, while the proportion of car preference was nearly 75% in the year, the figures for motorcycle were significantly lower, at about 8% and 10%, respectively .  
  
Turning to to US and UK, these countries had the same percentage of people who were in favored of car (60%). The lowest figure for this kind of vehicle was found in France, at only 40%. However, out of the four countries , the percentage of young people preferring biking was noticeably higher in this countries , reflecting that young generation here are more likely to become environmentally - conscious .  
  
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Where a single image is presented for review, this automatically uses a 3 paragraph format. This is due to the brief number of reporting possibilities from the image. A 4 paragraph presentation is used when 2 or more images are present. Each paragraph needs to have 3 sentences at least. The report format is off for this report. A single sentence is definitely not representative of a paragraph. It is the overstretchinof information to incorrectly create 4 paragraphs that resulted in an improperly focused report presentation. Only the last paragraph in this presentation meets the necessary paragraph requirements. Focus on proper formatting next time rather than discussion stretching for the wrong reasons.
***Task 2  
Many people have realized the importance of environmental protection. That being said, they hardly ever take action themselves.***  
## What are the reasons?What should be done to encourage individuals to take action on this issue?

  
A majority of people have been self-aware that the preservation of the environment is extremely essential. However, radical actions have yet been implied due to the misconception of everyone that the environmental conservation responsibility belongs to the local authority. Therefore, we should conduct propagandizing plans to change the point of the view of these residents that protecting the environment is the duty of everyone.  
  
From the past until now, no matter what nation, the responsibility of the governments is to ensure the safety of the citizens as well as their living habitat. Thus, the citizens think that even if they have a strong awareness of environmental protection, only the authorities have the right to imply it. Even more, if they take action on their own without any permission from the government, they may be sentenced to intervening in the work of the government. Therefore, to avoid such unwanted accidents like above, the residents would prefer to do nothing rather than contributing to the environmental conversation.  
  
Based on the recent misconception of the citizens, numerous propagandizing schemes should be applied to modify again their perspective that protecting the environment is the obligation of all. To be more specific, one of the factors that need to be prioritized in this change is the young generation as they are the ones who decide the later future of the country. Education departments should promote schools to teach the student that the environment-protecting duty belongs to everyone. Moreover, these adolescents should be reminded that any radical action to preserve the environment would always be fully supported with all the resources by the local authority. Then we will change the target to the adults. By propagandizing the importance of environmental protection through multi-platform such as the internet, TV, and newspaper, everyone will soon take the first step in this revolution.  
  
In conclusion, it is understandable that people have yet done anything to preserve the environment as they don't understand their role in this protecting work. However, I firmly believe that with effective propagandizing plans, everyone will take action as soon as possible after they truly understand their role.
The prompt restatement + question response paragraph is excellently done in this presentation. It is highly creative and shows a strong control over sentence development, clear thought development, even as the vocabulary is a bit exaggerated and used out of meaning. The examiner will score the effort in word usage though. It would be better to use simpler word references next time though. just to avoid exaggerations that tend to alter the presentation focus.  
  
~~like above~~  
There is no need to reference a sentence position wwhen it is still located in the same paragraph. This is an unnecessary discussion reference.  
  
propagandizing schemes  
Try the term "agressive government programs" next time. It will be easier understood by the reader.
## number of households using electrical tools for housework

  
  
The line graphs illustrate the proportion of households using electrical tools for housework and using hours in every family weekly between 1920 and 2019.  
  
It is obvious that the percentage of housewives choosing to use the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner was an upward trend during the research period. In contrast, It was the unstoppable fall in the number of working hours which housewives spent on household chores per week.  
  
As can be seen from the first chart, In 1920 there was no household used refrigerator in their home. However, this number rose rapidly to 100% of households after 80 years and remain stable from 2000. Likewise, the growth of the proportion of vacuum cleaner users was similar to the refrigerator one, but it reaches its top at 100% of housewives in the year 2000 and remains unchanged. Moreover, the percentage of housekeepers chosen to use washing machines was made up the highest at 40% in 1920, which then fluctuated slightly and got over 70% of users in 2019.  
  
At the same time, the amount of time which housewives spent on household chores per week decrease dramatically by 40 hours all over the period.
The line graphs  
How many line graphs are involved? Does each graph represent a different data set? How are these identified? The summary overview lacks clarity and proper information separation. Consider using a more detailed and individualized summary next time.  
  
, It was the unstoppable fall in the number of working hours which housewives spent on household chores per week.  
That resulted in what? The sentence structure is jumbled, resulting in a confusing reference. When presenting a trend, do not overcomplicate things. One trending reference is enough. The other trend can be part of a report paragraph instead. It will help you avoid creating confusing sentence structures such as this one.  
  
For the number of charts, you mentioned a "first" chart . So there are several other images? What happened to the other numerical ordinals? The paragraph further adds to the confusion of the paragraph content.
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## Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources.

  
***To what extent do you agree or disagree?***  
  
Recently, there is a notion that there is not enough place for wild animals to survive in this era. Therefore, efforts to conserve animals can be a meaningless and squander of resources; nevertheless, I firmly believe that the existence of wild life plays an indispensable role in human life. This essay will point out reasons for my statement.  
  
To begin with, animals provide mankind with a great amount of scientific resources. Many elements contained in body of wild species are really valuable in the process of researching science, especially in biology and chemistry. To illustrate, genetic code of monkey and gorilla, which has lots of similarities to human's one, is used ubiquitously in process of developing medicine as well as curing methods for man. Besides, white mouse has been considered as one of the most ideal samples for most of medical experiments since the laboratory was established.  
  
Furthermore, the survival of wild animals have always related directly to the existence of all species. If there are too many animals die out, the diversity of eco-system will be destroy, consequently, the loss of biodiversity will not only put human but also all kinds of living creatures at risks of extinction. For instance, pollination of many plants cannot be happened without participation of insects such as butterflies or bees, this will lead to the disappearance of worldwide flora. Moreover, without animals, people will have no milk to drink, no pets to raise and no meat to eat.  
  
In conclusion, due to the need of wild animals in biodiversity and scientific research. It is obvious that appearances of these species in this era put a blessing than a burden to mankind, therefore, people need to protect them even if it consume lots resources.
resources; nevertheless, I firmly believe  
Since you are now expressing your response opinion, this thought needs to stand out. Make this a stand-out statement by presenting it as a seperate thought. Use a new sentence instead of a combined thought presentation.  
  
~~This essay will point out reasons for my statement.~~  
Since you already provided the reason for your , in the response sentence, you need not say that you will explain your reasons. It is the thes is statement that is scored for accuracy, not the repeated instruction sentence.  
  
has **lots** of similarities  
The word "lots" is more of an English informal word. For academic writing use more professional equivalent words such as several, numerous, and marked. These words carry the same meaning as "lots" but within a more refined writing context.  
  
the diversity of eco-system will be **destroy, consequently,**  
2 errors in this presentation:  
- Destroy should be presented in an active present voice (destroyed) since the action is still currently active.  
- Grammar problem. Just as I mentioned earlier, 2 sentences need to be used. One for each idea. A comma should not be used in place of a period. More sentence structure exercises should help you clarify when a comma or period should be used in a sentence.  
  
cannot be happened  
- Do not mix past and present sentence structures. When something is ongoing, use current action references. Better tense usage skills need to be developed.  
  
Sentence structure enors are repeated throughout the essay. The GRA score will be disappointing.
***TOPIC: The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before.***  
## What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

  
  
In this day and age, the Internet has changed the way of distributing and consuming information. However, the expansion of the internet may lead to various unwanted issues. There are numerous problems behind this phenomenon, and several solutions should be adopted to address those problems.  
  
There are many issues that arise with the widespread use of the Internet. To commence with, the main problem for Internet users is the significant increase in cybercrime. In recent years, thousands of people face with information theft which can result in the loss of possession and personal information. Another serious problem is that minors may access to varieties of dangerous websites on the Internet. By way of illustration, many children all over the world suffered from life-threatening injuries on accounts of imitating bad videos on Youtube.  
  
In order to address the aforementioned issues, several actions can be taken to protect Internet users. The first measure would be to install current antivirus system for computers. Keeping that software updated will prevent digital devices from being attacked which may lead to the loss of vulnerable information. Another efficacious way is that parents should keep an eye on their children when they surf the Internet. For example, they should inform their minors with integral knowledge so as to raise their awareness on obtaining information from the Internet. In addition, restricting the access of children by requiring more confirmation is also a feasible way for parents to deal with potential cyber dangers.  
  
In conclusion, cyber problems can be ascribed to two reasons which are the rise of cybercrime and the access to ineligible websites of children, and this issue can be dealt with by a joint effort of both improving online security and raising awareness of minors.
There are numerous problems behind this phenomenon, and several solutions should be adopted to address those problems.  
While repeating the discussion points shows your ability to restate the instructions / questions, it does not reflect your ability to use short form, topic references in direct response to the questions The direct answers are scored in a major way in relation to task accuracy.  
  
the main problem for Internet users is the significant increase in cybercrime.  
In order to address the aforementioned issues, several actions can be taken to protect Internet users.  
These sentences are nothing more than non - scoring word fillers. By starting with a topic sentence, the C + C score is boosted as the discussion point is made clear at the start of the paragraph.  
  
and this issue  
As you are presenting a seperate topic, use a new sentence presentation instead. That will help you meet the minimum 2 sentence summary requirement and create a clearer summary presentation.
## colour does have an impactful effect on humans

  
  
When constructing and decorating buildings, architects usually design business premises or hospitals in consonance with some psychological theory related to colour. It is a common belief that colour can remarkably influence people's emotions and behaviours. However, there is no valid scientific evidence on how colours change workers' attitudes in workplaces. In my opinion, the quality of the work environment and excellent healthcare can make a significant change rather than colours themselves.  
  
Generally, painting bright colours such as yellow or blue with fewer patterns help increase employees' creativity and cause fewer distractions. In reality, colour is not a fundamental factor that makes them dedicate their talents and skills to the business. Working with a caring, subtle boss and cooperative colleagues provide workers with more positive energy and motivation to keep working effectively. Besides, business partners often visit a particular company mainly for work contractions, so they do not need to look around and decide what colour makes them feel pleased. Moreover, other elements such as sounds, light, modern technological facilities also play a vital role in growing productivity. For instance, a worldwide renowned e-commerce website, Amazon, erect an Amazon sphere containing various plants that give staff a sense of nature and calm to come up with novel ideas.  
  
In hospitals, patients go for examing their health, so they will not bother what colour the hospital wall is. Additionally, patients recover rapidly from operations because of high-quality healthcare equipment, exact treatment and encouragement from their families. Briefly saying, a good outcome after a process of treatments makes patients feel happy and optimistic to continue their lives. Similarly, medical staff do not give much attention to colours because they have numerous patients on the waiting list, so they have to work all day long, even late nights. Therefore, if they have just a little time to break, taking a nap in their own offices or going home is their usual option.  
  
In conclusion, although colour does have an impactful effect on human's emotions or behaviours, its outcome does not make any remarkable change in places like offices or hospitals. Therefore, in order to boost productivity in office buildings, business owners should offer more rewards to employees. Regular care and family are two major factors that a patient really need.
Please be conscious of the writing time allotment when writing the essay. It is necessary fen you to use a timer at the start of your excercises to figure out exactly how many words you can with, review, and edit within 40 minutes. You should find that when real time sets in, you cannot write almost 400 words. The safety target for the word count is exactly 300 words.  
  
It is a common belief ... there is no valid scientific evidence ...in workplaces.  
When writing the response statement to the true or false question, refer to the given keyword for task compliance scoring. These quotes are the r sentences where you could have inserted the keyword response. Yes, your response implies the keyword. Using the actual keyword is a score boost though as it clearly responds to the question.  
  
the quality of the work environment and excellent healthcare  
There is no response given in compliance with the second discussion question which is: "How far do colours influence people's health and capacity for work?" Your given answer is not relevant to the question. It does not meet the prompt requirement in terms of direct question responses.  
  
The provided discussion does not address the provided points regarding the effects of color. The writer took a different approach that resulted in a prompt alteration, leading to a failing task score.