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There are two sets of discords in the South China Sea. The first is about the tiny islands themselves and involves China, Taiwan, Philippines, Malaysia, Brunei, Vietnam, and limited extent in Indonesia. The second is about the spaces in between the tiny islands and that predominantly concerns the United State of America and China. China escalated an expedition to the Paracel Islands, between the coasts of China and Vietnam, and claimed them for the first time. During 1920 until 1930, France joined China and Japan in challenging the islands. This was no country consistently occupied or administered them. The bureau did not have the means to assess the islands itself so it simply copied existing maps and translated or transliterated the British names into Chinese. In doing so they included some mistakes printed on those maps.
Helo erwin,  
Hope you doing well, let me give you several suggest  
Please kindly check it out.  
  
==>The second is about the spaces ~~in~~between /(of) the tiny islands and ~~that~~ predominantly concerns ...  
==> This was no country consistently occupied or administered them(No countries stood on their area) . The bureau did not have ~~the means~~(permission) to assess the islands itself ...  
  
In this case, maybe you can extend the summary by sharpening and deepening the main idea  
Good Luck and keep fighting  
Best regards, Tami :)
hello erwin  
I have little corrections for you  
I think it is good enough  
  
**use connector such as after that, furthermore, etc to improve your writing**  
  
There are two ~~sets of~~ discords in the South China Sea.  
  
... tiny islands themselves ~~and~~ involves China, Taiwan, Philippines...  
  
The second is about the spaces ~~in~~ between the tiny islands and that predominantly concern~~s~~of the United State ...  
  
... coasts of China and Vietnam, ~~and~~then claimed them ...  
  
... joined China and Japan ~~in~~ challenging the islands.  
  
thanks  
keep writing
Hi Erwin, below are my thoughts for your article summary.  
  
- The first is about the tiny islands ~~themselves~~~~and~~that involves China,  
- concerns the United States of America  
- an expedition to the ~~Paracel~~Parallel Islands,  
- During 1920 ~~until~~to 1930,  
- This ~~was no~~is not a country  
- or administered ~~them~~ .  
- In doing so they ~~included~~made some mistakes printed on ~~those~~the maps.  
  
There you have it Erwin, as you can see, it's just a few minor details that needs modification, however, even if this are minor corrections, it will still be best not to have them in the essay or the sentences. One thing that can be done is to practice writing more and keep a complete sentence, with the linking verbs and the correct form of words that will definitely enhance the ideas of your sentences.
***The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people  
  
To what extent do you agree or disagree?***  
  
Connections amongst society will be had a bad effect of using cutting-edge technology such as a device which is operate applications of social media. I am more likely to disagree with this statement because of it makes people's lives easier to give some information and interact with other person, but should be controlled of using internet. Humans lives will be difficult if this sophisticated technology is absence.  
  
Nowadays, people witnessed dienate themselves as a adverse effect. This is because human is addict with this device and do not care about circumstance. For example, over active in cyberspace makes people to ignore socializing in the real world. Consequently, more and more limited our association so that it could became antisocial figure in the future.  
  
On the other hand, people always using electronic media for routines. This is due to the fact that society usage of communication to connect to other people who live in long distance and sometimes for business such as online shop. Based on my own experience, sending message with social media is faster than using letter. As a result, it makes people's lives more convenient. This is no doubt that with technology advances people's lives better than before  
  
In conclusion, it is clear that sophisticated technology indeed gives negative impact, but it is very helpful for human being. It hinge on people who using this technology, because human should be use this media wisely. Although people's lives easier, it might be controlled.
Hi Ryan...  
There are some corrections for you, Just cut to the case.  
  
I am more likely to disagree with this statement because ~~of~~ it makes people's lives easier to give some informations and interact with other person, but should be controlled of using internet. Humans lives will be difficult if this sophisticated technology is absence.  
  
Because + s+ v  
Because of + n  
On the other hand, people always~~using~~ use electronic media for routines (there is no verb)  
always = present  
  
Well done mate!
Hi Riandi, please find a few suggestions that will hopefully enhance your essay.  
  
- Connections amongst society ~~will be had a bad~~has negative  
- effects of using cutting-edge technology  
- such as a device ~~which is operate~~and applications of social media.  
- because ~~of~~ it makes people's lives  
- easier,~~to~~ give ~~some~~more information  
- and interact with other ~~person~~people ,  
- ~~but should be controlled of using~~however, internet usage should be controlled~~internet~~ .  
- ~~Humans~~Peoples lives will be  
  
- dienate - I'm not pretty sure what you mean by this word, please elaborate.  
  
- themselves as an adverse effect.  
- This is because ~~human is addict~~people gets addicted with this device  
- and do not care about the circumstances .  
- cyberspace makes people ~~to~~ ignore socializing  
- Consequently, ~~more and more~~this limits~~limited~~  
- our association ~~so that it could became~~and results to people becoming antisocial ~~figure in the future~~ .  
  
There you have it Riandi, as you can see, there is quiet a lot of enhancement to your essay and I took the liberty to correct the first 2 paragraphs and I hope you follow though and practice editing the last two.
Nowadays, China's utility is quite high. Due to the fact that energy consumption will increase dramatically in 2030 as a prediction. The government planned to expand nuclear power massively. China started their first nuclear plant in 1994. China has 36 reactors in operation and 20 else under construction. Four have been approved and the others still in the planning stages. By 2030, China targeted to increase their nuclear power up to 9%. Nuclear generation capacity will have increased eightfold over the same period.  
  
After Fukushima disaster in 2011, the Chinese authorities halted the nuclear project. They asked the government to check safety system of a nuclear plant. This year, Government had resolved to take care of its nuclear-energy programme. Government ambitious to reduce pollution in china by reducing greenhouse-gas emissions and ambition to expertise in nuclear, so they need to emerge their nuclear.  
  
Chinese are happy that they will have friendly environment power, but they demand safety system. Early this year, the government acknowledge that its safety system still inadequate. In April, a national nuclear safety system was revealed. Debora Selingohn of the University of California said that she believes that government can keep and handle safety standard tightly.
HI Fuziyahtami  
your summary is intersting, But here some suggestion to improve your writing  
  
China ~~has~~ had 36 reactors in operation  
Four ~~have~~ had been approved and the others ... (it is much better if you merge it into one sentence, hence the reader will understand it easily)  
  
By 2030, China ~~targeted~~ will have targeted to ... ( time signal BY to describe plan in the future must use simple future perfect)  
  
Best wishes
**WHY I READ BOOK EVERY SINGLE DAY**  
  
Speaker in TEDx said, every body in the word want good life, but also there cannot get it one of them. Todays, globalizations are moving faster, it can be seen developing modern technology, business global, international diplomationand etc. People are not chalanges if they do not have good strategy, More persons are success in worldwide followed by good ways, like mentor who guidance their plan. Mentors are vital item to be success, they have power to changes life, more powerfull and give the best ways in the future, such as Mahatma gandhi, Bill gates, Kennedy they are mentors. For example many people came to Hollywood every year to got their dream as artist, businessman, politics and many kinds, every body want to got something in hollywood but every body not got they want in hollywood, because they are do not know the best ways. As the result gread deal of people are not perfect to get their dreams without mentors.  
  
Design life what do you want, thinks it when you are in 60 years old, to answer it more persons in the worldwide said, they want to be succes in politics, carreer, life and etc. However lifes is short, but also we should get best achievment during life, thats why we are needs tutor. Based on speaker there is good and best mentor in the world, that is book. You can enhance your skills, changes good mindset, more knowledge and get do you want by books, that is short cut mentors. Most people in Europe divide to budgeting money for buy books, they are save their money espesially for buy it, this phenomenon is common in Europe civil. On the other hand most people in Europe are consious that book is treasure, good tutor and good teacher, everybody who want hapiness good life and get the dream, suggested to read book every single day.
Hi!  
  
Here's some comment from me  
  
**everybody** in the **world** want (to have)..  
  
but also there cannot get .....? ( what do you mean?)  
  
Today~~s~~ , globalization~~s~~~~are~~ is moving faster, it can be seen ~~developing~~ through modern technology, ~~business global~~ global business, international diplomation(space )and etc( try to avoid etc. how about: just to name few)  
  
People are not ~~chalanges~~ challenge if they do not have good strategy, ~~More~~ person~~s~~ are success in (...) like mentor who guid~~ance~~ guide their plan.  
  
Mentors are vital item to be success ( mentors are vital figure to inspired someone to success. Is that what you mean?)  
..more powerful~~l~~ ..  
  
Cheers
Hi Bams  
Let me give you some advice...  
  
... every body (everybody) in the ~~word~~(world) want (a) good life, but ...  
People are not ~~chalanges~~ (challenge) if they do not ...  
... politics and many kinds, ~~every body~~ [s (everybody)want to got something ...  
As the result ~~gread~~~~(great)~~ deal of people are not ...  
  
However ~~lifes~~(life) is short, but also ...  
... people in Europe are ~~consious~~(conscious) that book is treasure, (a) good tutor (...), everybody who want ~~hapiness~~(happiness) good life and get the ...  
  
Many misspell word  
You should check your summary carefully...
Hello Bams.  
These are my thoughts for yours.  
GOOD LUCK  
  
... everybody in the word wantS TO GET A good life, but ...  
Todays, globalizations are moving faster~~,~~(You cannot merge two sentences without a conjunction. I think here is period, not comma) . ITS REASON IS BECAUSE THERE ~~it~~ can be seen developing (...), international ~~diplomation~~ DIPLOMATIC and etc. People are ~~not chalanges~~ UNCHALLENGED if they do not have A good strategy~~,~~ . More persons are successFUL in worldwide (...), like A mentor who ~~guidance~~ GUIDES their plan. THE Mentors are vital itemS to be successFUL~~,~~ BECAUSE they ARE SUPPOSED TO have A power to change~~s~~ THE life~~,~~ more powerful~~l~~ and give the best (...) Bill gates, Kennedy WHO they are mentors. For example, many people ~~came~~ COME to Hollywood every year to ~~got~~ GET (Remember TO INFINITIVE, TO + V1) their dream as artist, (...) and many kinds~~,~~ . every ody wants to ~~got~~ GET something in THE Hollywood, but everybody DOES not ~~got~~ GET WHAT they want in Hollywood~~,~~ because they ~~are~~ do not know ...  
  
As the result, ~~gread dea~~ BUNCH of people are not perfect (...) without THE mentors.  
  
Design life what do you want, thinks it when you are in 60 years old, to answer it ...  
Honestly, I could not find what you explain in that sentence. It is quite messy. I suggest you rewrite that.  
  
However, ~~lifes~~ THE LIFE is short, but also we should get THE best ~~achievment~~ ACHIEVEMENT during THE ENTIRE life~~,~~ . that Is why we ~~are needs~~ NEED tutor. Based on speaker, there is THE good and best (...), that is WELL-KNOWN AS A book. You can enhance your skills, change~~s~~ THE good mindset, AND GET more knowledge ~~and get do~~ WHICH you want WHEN YOU READ ~~by~~ THE books BECAUSE ~~that is~~ THOSE ARE short cut mentors. Most OF people in Europe divide to budgeting money for buyING THE books~~,~~ SO THAT they ~~are~~ save their money espesially ~~for buy it~~ TO BUY THOSE.~~,~~ this phenomenon is ...  
  
... most OF people in Europe are ~~consious~~ CONSCIOUS that book is A treasure, good tutor and good teacher~~,~~ SINCE everybody who want OBTAINING hapiness good life and ~~ge~~ t the dream~~,~~ TO BE suggested to read ...
Halllooo  
I have some inputs for you.  
  
~~Speaker in TEDx~~TED Speaker said, every body in the word wants good life, ~~but also there cannot get it one of them~~ .  
... moving faster, it can be seen by developing modern technology, ~~business~~ global business, international ~~diplomation~~~~dipjavascript:paste\_strinL(selektion,3,'','~~ ','')lomatic and etc. ~~People are not chalanges~~ if they do not have good strategy, ~~More p~~ ersons are success in worldwide followed ...  
  
Bams, i think you have to really pay attention with your sectance. please kindly distinguish them whether it is verbal or non verbal sentence. in addition, you must have at least**S + V + O** on your sentence, in order to have understandable sentence.  
  
Keep writing
When we park a car in the parking area then we walk into the mall and back, we have to remember where is the car. The hippocampus has memorizing responsibility. Brain made by a hundred billion neurons. Neurons communicate with each other by sending a signal. There is a brain research with rat, that shows the way brain remembers. Brain cells illustrated in the picture with colors. When a rat was put into the box and let move around to looking for food, cells show something like a fire sort but when the box expands the fire location are expanded. In a border puts into the box, fire sort will emerge at the location where the border. There are few cells consist boundary cells, place cells, grid cells, head-direction cells, visual imagery. All the cells are connected to make a pattern like a map. The brain will make a map of a place by exploring around. The brain will record every boundary, the more spacious a location the more fire sort are made. We could people to remember a way or place by walking around.
Hi Fauziyah..  
These below are my thoughts towards your summary. Please, check it out..  
^\_^  
  
... parking area AND then ~~we~~ walk into the (...) to remember A LOCATION ~~where is~~~~the~~ THAT car.  
THE Brain ~~made by~~ IS COMPOSED BY a hundred billion neurons. THE Neurons communicate with each ...  
There is a brain research with A rat, ~~that shows~~ SHOWING the way OF THE brain ~~remembers~~ TO REMEMBER. THE Brain cells illustrate~~d~~~~in~~ the picture with colors. When ~~a~~ THE rat was put into the box and let IT moveS around to looking for food, THE cells show something ...  
  
~~but~~ HOWEVER, when DISTANCE BETWEEN the box ~~expands~~ AND the fire location are expanded. In a border put~~s~~ into the box, fire sort (...) where the border LOCATED. There are A few cells consistING THE boundary cells, place ...  
  
The brain will make ~~a~~ THE map of a place ...  
... every boundary~~,~~ the more spacious a location ... ~~We could~~ people ~~to~~ COULD remember a way or ...
The table gives information about the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types during 9 years. Overall, there were three secondary schools that declined the interest of children: Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled school and there were ones that were community schools increased from 2000 to 2009.  
  
According to the data, the proportion of specialist schools decreased every period by 1 percent and for grammar in each period was experiencing a decline of 5 percent. Besides that, there was a very significant of proportion decrease was voluntary-controlled school by 8 percent in each period. From three secondary schools were increased although there was a decrease in significant and not.  
  
And then there was one that has increased dramatically, namely community schools rose by 20 percent, which meant a residual interest to this pretty sizable. And additional, it was Initially only 12 percent in 2000 and then 58 percent rising in 2009.
Did you ever felt you are the most of ugly person this universe? Let us meet Robert Hoge who felt being ugly and was tell everyone what's we can learn from being ugly. Hoge, the man who has a first-sized tumor in center-point of his face. It is made array of operations to "fix" his face. He told everyone due to his ugly, yet everyone talks it is not true with beautiful words to console him namely "you are beautiful" for him it is barefaced liar.  
  
Into consideration in the fact that he wrote an article in Times which titled "5 Things I've Learned from Being Ugly" and told us there is no vital problem from being ugly. He has a perfective about ugliness is not deficit of beauty but ugliness is own of everyone and it is as well a wonderful thing, that's the first thing of the five things. Secondly, you should be politeness to stop trying persuade the different of other people. Next, beauty is dynamic thing with constantly changing by time. Allow the kids to stay curious and learn about ugliness and we stay to teach them how to be polite person. Last but not the least, Hoge campaign to you to recognize ugliness is the major part of who we are.
**My Seven Species of robot - Dennis Hong**  
  
Dennis Hong is the chairman of Romela, the robotic company in the USA and they have large quantities of rewards from prestige institutions. To run its business, they set 5 effective behaviours while the most powerful secrets are nobody criticises anybody's ideas, nobody critics any opinion. This in absolutely principal because often students fear of they fell uncomfortable to deliver idea or advice. How others likely think about their opinions is always come up in the mind. It effectively impact on students' performance, they have wacky, crazy, brilliant idea which has never been existence. Finally, the whole room is just electrified with creative energy and this is how we develop our ideas. The second secret is to endeavour your robot to overcome current problems. The company is valuable due to its contribution to society and the world.
hello Abrahamlincoln, I want you obtain some suggestion from me for your essay,  
  
here we go:  
  
... and they have large of quantities of rewards ...  
  
noun clause about Quantity or Quality should use "of"  
  
To run its business, they set 5 effective behaviours (...) nobody criticises in anybody's ideas, nobody critics any opinion.  
  
please use "in" "on" or "at" to more explain your meaning.  
  
... they have wacky, crazy, and brilliant idea which has ...  
The second secret is to endeavour your ...  
  
finally and ultimately use as conclution in your essay, please use it on last sentence.  
  
note: keep writing and go ahead.
Many peoples think that when people became adult their brain did not produce any cells again. But Sandrine Thuret, a neuroscientist stated that adult brain can generate new nerve cells. The part of human brain named hippocampus are responsible for learning, memory, mood and emotion. Hippocampus produces 700 new neurones per day. And then, while a human became 50 years old, all their neurone cells are exchanged with the hippocampus.  
  
 Otherwise, specific activity and behavior will increase neurogenesis or instead decreased it. Activities like study, sleep, and running will increase neurogenesis. On the contrary, activities like drink alcohol, stress, and getting old will decrease neurogenesis. And then what kind of food we eat also have contribution to increase neurogenesis or decreased it. Food like blueberries, dark chocolate, and salmon are contribute to increasing neurogenesis. Conversely, food with high fat, and ethanol will decrease neurogenesis.
Hello Yonathan, I want you obtain some suggestion for you essay from me, here we go:  
  
Many peoples think that when ...  
  
people was being plural noun, you should not use "s"  
  
And then, while a human became 50 ...  
  
conjuction and only use for connect equal things, you can use another cunjunction.  
  
Activities like study, sleep, and running will increase neurogenesis.  
  
you can replace "like" to be "such as"  
you should replace will to be "can/could"  
  
Food like blueberries, dark chocolate~~,~~ and salmon are contribute...  
  
note: keep writing and go ahead.
Rita Pierson, a teacher, spent her entire life either the schoolhouse or the way to the schoolhouse. She is come from educator families, both of her parents are teacher. She taught since 4 decades ago. So she can look at education reform from other views. Some of those changes have been good but some of them have been bad. She argued that poverty, low attendance and negative influences are the common reasons of the kids drop out. She regrets why people never discuss about the value and the vital of human relations. She also said quotes from James Comer that no significant relationship will affected to zero significant learning. Furthermore, she told about her journey taught in which low academically class. She got essential point from his mother experiences. When her mother passed away and so many her mother students came to her funeral. The point is her mother left a legacy of relationships that could never lost.
She ~~is~~~~come~~came from educator families,..  
So she ~~can~~could look at education reform...  
Some of those changes ~~have~~had been good but some of them ~~have been~~ bad.  
... and negative influences ~~are~~were the common reasons of the kids ~~drop~~dropped out. She ~~regrets~~regreted why people never discuss ...  
... Comer that no significant relationship will be affected to zero significant learning.  
  
hi dioba,,tha's a;; abou my advices for you,,keep writing properly yeah
*She is come from educator families**(THIS SENTENCE IS PRETTY CONFUSING TO ME SINCE YOU PUT 2 VERBS SIMULTANEOUSLY,IS AND COME .) She ~~is~~ comeS from educator(...) parents are teacherS. She HAS taught ~~since~~ FOR 4 decades ~~ago~~ . (SINCE* IS USED TO MARK PERFECT TENSE) So  
  
,  
**(put comma here)** she can look at educationAL reformATIONS from other views.*Some of those* changes have been good ***(avoid high frequency vocabularies)*** but *some of them***Redundancy** have been bad( high frequency vocabulary) .  
  
She regrets why people HAVE never discussED about the value... ( NEVER IS USED FOR PERFECT AND FUTURE )  
She got essential point from his mother experiences( THIS SENTENCE IS PRETTY CONFUSNG TO ME AND YOU NEED TO BE CONSISTENT AS YOU USE *SHE AND HIS* .  
  
... away ~~and~~  
  
,  
(PUT COMMA HERE)~~so many her mother students~~**a vast number of students'** mother came ...  
... of relationships that could HAVE never lost.  
  
note:  
  
avoid using high frequency vocabularies  
pay attention to subject verb agreement  
attempt to utilize complex sentence  
e.g: although SV, SV or SV although SV  
enhance your lexical resource