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**Some people think when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently while others considered they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.**  
  
It is more and more popular amidst a large number of company that aims to take people who has a high creativity, and able to work independently when the process of recruiting. However, others opine that several factors, such as co-operative and obedient workers are far needed as the main measurement. This essay agrees with the first belief since the successful company should be secured by people who have a high credibility.  
  
It is certainly true that some groups of people who afford to work in a team is necessary as they have a good communication skill to discuss their own views to other peers without any difficulties. However, some of them appear that they are not a typical of co-operativee workers but more likely to become followers since they have a limited experience. Furthermore, they only come to the workplace to finish what they have to do as an order. Thus, it seems that company has restricted their movement to develop their ability.  
  
On the contrary, people who are able to create a breathtaking novel idea will be more functional for firm to boost their performance. For example, 63% of marketing office employed more than a hundred of innovative people who are able to create new slogan, jingle or gimmick, as stated by David Gilbert as a Head of Human Resouces in one of advertising companies. Moreover, independent employers are far important so they do not rely on their task to someone else, and they enable to do a self-correction.  
  
In conclusion, I would disagree to the notion that people who capable of working in a team and following the instruction are able to lead the company to grow. However, recruting creative and independent people might bring a successful bussiness. (291)
***Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion.***  
  
It is the opinion of some people that believe in successful life we need to give our maximum capability in work and is followed by our extra effort to raise it, whereas there are several keys to obtain the successful life without only do them. This essay will include some reasons why we need optimum effort and work to get our dreams and when we don't just need them to reach our prosperity in life.  
  
To begin with, I personally agree that some essential factors such as willingness to success which must be accompanied by hard work and determination are worthy for our path live. As we can see, there are enormous people who have proven that the background of their successfulness reveals that they all need to give their best in works and their endless efforts. Usually, people who have the limit income or live in poverty condition occasionally have assiduous efforts for changing their lives. The real examples of people who can success by their determinations even without money or power since their born are likely Steve Jobs and Jacob Arabo who today already being fantastic popular because of the prosperity of their businesses.  
  
However, it may be true if somebody else thinks that we need other keys for getting successfulness or we cannot just depend on our extra powers in work and the extremely efforts because of huge things of possibilities that we can find in our real life. Several factors such as the luck and the opportunity can be the part of people successes. For instance, in several countries mainly in the development countries, still there an enormous number of unemployment who jobless and cannot reach the best live standard as the general people. It is not happening because they are lazy or less effort, but some of them already release their maximum energy for surviving their lives by hard working as labors only just for continuing their lives and fulfilling the demand of life. Nevertheless, there is no job opened or limited of job fields make them encouraged for hard working in an uncertain condition in every day.  
  
Based on my view, there are some real facts which describe that the lucky people can obtain their successes faster than the hard-worker people, and also even the people have already done the best of their capabilities but if there is the opportunity, sometimes their efforts will be useless at the time.  
  
All in all, the willingness for hard work and extremely efforts are needed to back up our dream to obtain the successfulness, but we must be realistic that the key factors of prosperity sometimes are followed by the luck and the exact opportunity for getting it. (450 words)
**Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion.**  
  
Hard work and persistence are believed as the keys to get success in life. However, others argue, there are other enormous factors to support people's triumphant. Personally, I believe that hard work and determination are not the only ones reason for successful life but I realise both factors become the keys. This essay will first discuss how decent line of family can help people to get their goals, and then talk how hard work and determination give strong benefit for people's winning.  
  
In fact, some people have had a destiny as a success person, even before they are born. It can be seen from their family. An individual who born in rich family live with luxuries, and dead with their property. It is proven by some children from celebrities. They will be easier to get anything they want because of their descent line. All of facilities that are provided for them, make those children get high quality of education, health facilities, and any others. However, we are unable to make a generalisation for that since many people can handle that richness and dissipate it.  
  
Honestly, I strongly believe that hard work and determination still become the biggest keys for getting success. Taking data from People Magazine, seventy eight from one hundred the most influence people over the world, such as Mark Zuckerberg (The founder of Facebook) and Steve Jobs (The founder of Apple inc.), was not born form wealthy family. What they have are strong determination for success and hard work.  
  
All in all, I believe that hard work and determination are the key for people's successful though there are other factors which able to influence it.
**Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion**  
  
Working hard and strong determination are a way to get our dreams. Some people assume, both of them are the main keys to catch success in life. However, other believe there are other factors which cause people's dreams come true. This essay will discuss both opinions and i extremely believe that hard work and strong push are the main keys to success in life, however big motivation from families be able people goals happen.  
  
Families are a reason some societies hold their purpose in life. As we know that, families always become the first place of people get push. Due to of that, a success usually is caused of that reason. For instance, I have neighbour, she has 5 children , 3 of them aged under 8 and other approximately 9-11 years old. Unfortunately, she had not husband 3 years ago because his cancer. Because of her children, she builds a restaurant and now, she is the one of famous entrepreuneur which able have 7 restaurants and other business. Based on the explanation, we can conclude that the reason why that women success because of her children.  
  
Even though, families can cause people to success, but the main keys is hard work and willpower, personally, I strong believe, without both reasons people can not get their dreams. Based on the phychology article at Australia University, explained 50% cause of people success in Australia is hard work and 25% is big push from their self. In addition, Encouragement by ourself when, doing job is important because humans always have the awareness to make a success as a necessity rather than desire. Thus, the drive to achieve success will be much stronger.  
  
In conclusion, even there are other factors which cause people achieve their achievement but the main point is working hard, and big determination by ourself. (305w).
**Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion**  
  
These days, the majority of people believe that hard-working and determination are the way to be a successful person. Meanwhile, a number of aspects are able to make people success. However, as far as I am concerned, those two things and other categories will bring people to have bright future. This essay will first discuss about spirit to have better life and making final target as the key of success and then talk about permit and support from parents to make dreams coming true.  
  
To begin with, everyone can gain a success if they want to give all efforts that they have and have full of spirit which will push people beyond their limitation. After that, with strong determination every obstacle that comes to people's life will extremely be easier to face, and determine what our target able to boost motivation in life is. According to the story of Muhammad Ali, world boxing champions, he had tremendously power to fight their opponent even though he got various injured in his body. It is my firm belief that if there is a will, there is a way, and I am utterly sure that people able to prove it in their entire life.  
  
On the other hand, other factors can be considered to reach the top of inhabitants' life. Firstly, without permit and support from parents everything is impossible due to the fact that they are the nearest members and know anything in people's life. Also, by having purpose to help other people after being success will make the steps simpler. For instance, when I faced final exam in my university, I asked my family to give all support to me and finally I could pass it perfectly. In my opinion, people will help us to be success if we help other people as well. So, do the best for us and for everyone.  
  
To sum up, I believe that hard-working and great determination will bring us to get our dream and support from family gives essential power to keep going for being successful person.
Mardian, this is a little suggestion for you.  
  
... efforts that they have and have full of spirit which ...  
You make repetition there. It is not good in my opinion. Why you don't change like this:  
  
... that they have and **FULFILL THEIR MIND WITH** spirit which will push ...  
  
he had ~~tremendously~~**TREMENDOUS** power to fight their ...  
tremendously ---> adverb  
tremendous ---> adjective  
  
placing adjective before noun is more appropriate
DEAR MARDIAN.  
To begin with, IT IS UNDENIABLY BELIEVED THAT ~~everyone~~ HUMAN BEINGS can gain a successFULL LIFE if they ~~want to give all efforts~~~~that they~~~~have~~~~and~~ have full of spirit AND WANT TO GIVE FULL EFFORTS FOR WHAT THEY AIM which will push THEM beyond their limit~~ation~~ .  
  
... be easier to BE faceD, and determine.
hello, here are my suggestions,  
  
1. After that, with strong determination every obstacle (...), and determine what our target ...  
--> you use "determination" or different parts of speech of "determination" several times. It can switch to another word to express the same meaning and show your ability of vocabulary.  
  
2. ... that they are the nearest members and know .....  
--> closest might be better.  
  
hope it helps!
***Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion***  
  
Hard willing and hardworking are both keys to success in reality life. However, some people think that not just these couple of factors that make our dream come true. In my perspective, hard effort and determination are the most important factors that can deliver people to be success owing to the fact that both of them can push people to always struggle with their dream and never give up until they can achieve what they want.  
  
First of all, a result is always based on how people do it, and both of factors always give a turning out that has same proportion with what has been done before. There are many well-known people who achieve their success just by doing it. For example Erwin Schrödinger, the most influences person in science. Previously, he is humble person who has not extraordinary talent. In as much as he always study more and more, he can find novel invention in science that no one made it before.  
  
On the other hand, many gifted people with their extraordinary talent who lose their dream just because they have not hard willing and hard working. Thomas Alfa Edison said that to be success, people just need 1% intelligence and 99% effort to make it happen. Thank to this statement, talent do not give much influences and it cannot change anything without action.  
  
All in all, hard willing and hardworking are both of the essential factors to achieve well-being in reality life, and without action a dream never happen.
DEAR PRAMUDIANA  
TAKE A LOOK AT THIS.  
SUCCESS IS A RESULT THAT HARD TO BE DEFINED, IT CAN BE SUBSTANTIAL IMPROVEMENT OF FINANCIAL, INTELLECTUAL, OR EVEN SPIRITUAL. FOR THIS REASON, NEEDLESS TO SAY THAT HARD WORK AND DETERMINATION ARE THE TOP POINTS TO SUCCEED. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARGUE THAT OPPORTUNITY AND GUIDANCE WILL MAKE THE THEIR DREAM COME TRUE. IN MY PERSPECTIVE, WITH A STRONG PERSEVERANCE AND DILIGENCE, ALL THE FACTORS IN TERM OF BECOMING SUCCESSFUL MIGHT BE NEUTRALIZED.
**Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion**  
  
Everyone absolutely has desire to be success in life and some people believe that the main aspect to reach the goal is hard work and determination. However, others argue that there is another factor behind the success. I firmly believe that determination is a convenient key to success while an obvious schedule board as a planning method is needed when gaining a successful life.  
  
Creating a mind map of the future planning is the wise step that we should make before taking a real action. A vision planning will be our guidance when we begin determined work. Based on a motivational book titled 'When the Dream Comes True' by Thania Miles, there are many categories which provide the success in life. One of the lists is schedule board. Every step of our life should be noted and when we able to fulfil our requirement as well as what we wrote, we can achieve our goal easily. However, as far as i am concern, schedule board which id designed by us will be useless if we do not determine it.  
  
Determination and hard work are the real activities that we should do when we want to be success. Although the tracks are difficult, people who have a sophisticated desire will keep trying through their optimum ability. For instance, Joe Alexander, 15 years old big dreamer, got a precious nobel as the greatest pianist over the world after he practised every day and struggle since he was five, finally he can have a big smile in his face when he experienced the nobel as his biggest goal. Now, he becomes a successful boy in his early age because he has been reached success through the competition.  
  
All in all, through hard work and determination, at the end we can achieve our success. I believe that when people create the mapping plan and try their best with determination, it would be easier to make they dream which is being success in life become true.
hallo ifra.. i want to give you some suggestion.. i hope it helps..  
  
... believe that the main aspect to reach the goal is hard work and determination . ( **The main aspects to reach the goal are....** )  
  
... the future planning is ~~the~~ A wise step that ...  
...and when we ARE able to fulfil our (...), schedule board which id **(is)** designed by us ...  
  
Be careful with subject verb agreement, you need to more concern with this matter.  
  
Good Luck.
Hello ifra,  
  
... to reach the goal is hard work and determination. However, others argue that there is another factor behind the success  
Your background seems to less paraphrase the question. To paraphrase it I suggest to you :  
  
1. Change the sentence into passive forms:  
  
Hard work and determination are believed by some people ...  
  
2. Then, Try to find the synonym:  
  
Tough effort and resolution are believed by some ...  
  
... key to success ~~while~~ , **SO** an obvious schedule board ...  
3. While is used usually for contradiction. However in your sentence is not kind of contradiction, because you add some details, so you can change into above words.
In business area, it is pivotal to design a system that can lead their companies to become successful. This system includes managing and selling new product to catch big profit, but this system not generate new knowledge. They only repeat the step without manage their enlightenment. According to the speakers, as a consequence of wanting to become success, the company manager placing too much trust to expert, usually consults to the specialist to gain an understanding of particular system. However, the expert is not always true, if the system is more complex, pundits cannot ensure a fully information. In order to solve these problems, company have to adjust their attitude and become more realistic. They also have to strict the control on organization systems and the firm should duplicate not only succeeding system but also workers skills.  
  
Source : IELTS Cambridge
**Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion**  
  
Owing to the fact that the key to success in life are strenuous work and resolve. But it is popularly believed that there are other factors to get successful in life. Personally, I believe that blessing from parents and communication skills with god and others are an enormous integral to achieve the success.  
  
To begin with, most people often claim that strenuous work and determination are a massive essential to get success. According to the latest research of Professor Jibiyako in Tokyo, 86 percent of primary school in Japan has already gave guidelines for students that to achieve a success, arduous work and perseverance are an enormous important. As a consequence, Japan has advance technology because it has people who have a strong mental to work hardly and to develop their country. however, in my opinion, experience and high level of education is an immense integral to get the best quality in life because not be able to deny that lots of people compete to get prime position in working and it needs huge skills and intelligent to make company believe that we have qualification that they need for development their cooperation.  
  
On the other hand, there are other factors to get successful. Firstly, parents are a huge influential factor in our life especially their blessing that an able to thoroughly smooth of our way in life. based on my experience when I accepted in my college in 2012, at the moment, it was hard to me got the highest score in final exam, but in my surrender, I always called my parents and I asked to them that gave blessing for me to obtain that answered easily in examination. As a result, I passed from my college with the highest score in my university and government gave me abroad scholarship to continue my study. Secondly, communication skill with god with praying and asking the best way because on the grounds that God created all of things in the world, such as oxygen to breath for living things (human, animals, plants). Thus, God certain know that the best way for us. Meanwhile, ability to communicate with other people especially people who have experience in one job that we want to apply is an immense essential to make easily acceptance in company.  
  
All in all, as far as I am concerned, I believe that hard work and determination are an essential to get success, besides there are other factors, such as parents approval and communicate skill to complete our desirability to success and the most an integral is the highest of education that is an immense as determine factor to success in life.
hello willy, this is my suggestion for your writing. hopefully, it can help you.  
  
Owing to the fact that the key to success ...  
"owing to the fact that " has the same meaning with "because"==> so, i think you should put in 2 sentence==> for example: sentence + owing to the fact that+ sentence // owing to the fact that + sentence, sentence  
  
But it is popularly believed that ...  
do not put "but" in front of your sentence because it has function just to be conjunction ==> for example, sentence+comma+ but+ sentence ==> or you can change it with another word like nerveless / however  
  
... school in Japan has already ~~gave~~given guidelines for (...) are an enormous important (it is adjective, and it should be followed by noun) .
**Some people think that hard work and determination are the keys to success in life. Some, on the other hand, think that there are other factors behind a successful life. Give your opinion**  
  
There is an opinion that having hard work and decisive personalities are the secret of being success. Others believe that having those personalities are not enough. In my opinion, not only hard work and determination, but also family influence are needed to reach the success.  
  
Today, life is getting harder and harder. In order to deal with the problems around us, we should have the good personal habits that are able to overcome those problems. Hard work and determination are the most needed personalities nowadays. Research conducted by Mr. Fujinuma Satoru from King University of London tells has told that 43 percent of people having this personality gets the better chance to be more success, and in addition, he takes the wages as the indicator of success because it is hard to measure other indicators. Furthermore, I briefly believe that hard work without determination can decrease the chance to be success since the companies, nowadays, need the people having those traits as their employees.  
  
However, based on my experience, family's influence gives the big impact to be one of the factors of people's success. Every person in the world needs supports when they are down. The TED presentation in Arizona, presented by Mr. John Wakawangze from Leeds University, presents that family gives 63 percent of people's success. He argued that people cannot make a big step in their life without the influence from people around them, especially the relatives.  
  
All in all, based on the research that I've mentioned before, I strongly believe that having a character to choose a decision and giving all of our efforts to do work are not enough. We also need the support from the closest people, especially our family to grab the success of life.  
  
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