dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
## Education With Fun

  
  
A group of people think that school should have more entertainment, whereas, others belive that schools should only focus on education purpose. The aim of this piece of writing is clarify both views and express the author's opinion.  
  
On the one hand, people who support the idea that school should to be more entertaining believe that school is a place where children spend most of their time. It would be boring and also could make students tired as well as study ineffectively if there were no entertainment at school. Moreover, having more entertainment in school can help students identify their own forte, as well as improve their social skills. For instance, students, after stressful classes, often look forward to light lessons such as music or outdoor extracurricular activities to freshen up their minds and show their talents. That makes students feel more comfortable and learn much better.  
  
On the other hand, a school only focus on education purpose makes students feel stressed and depressed. Students can not concentrate on lessons and always feel tired when going to school. In addition, if students did not have entertainment, they could not promote their creativity as well as their fortes, which might make them become inflexible, taciturn and put them under stress. For example, a student who only study and have no relaxation or outdoors activities may study very well; nevertheless, his soft skills are not good and there is no flexibility in communications situations.  
  
In conclusion, both ideas have their own positive and negative aspects, as well as diffents impacts on students. Personally, I belive that school should be more entertaining because it can make students become more creative and study better.
The essay is not qualified to receive a passing score due to task writing instruction inaccuracy. The provided writer opinion sentence committed 2 errors:  
  
1. The discussion representation is incorrect. He has indicated a comparative discussion + personal opinion format when the requirement was to discuss the public opinion he agrees with over 2 supporting paragraphs.  
  
2. He has not presented a personal opinion + thisis statement to refer to his personal opinion  
  
His prompt paraphrase is also incorrect as it is a run-on sentence. Both the first and last paragraphs must contain 3-5 sentences to qualify for scoring. These 2 paragraphs are very format focused in terms of scoring.  
  
The writer does not present his own opinion until the closing paragraph, causing another task format error. The personal opinion must be the basis of the reasoning paragraphs. The current format will result in a failing score.
## the importance of interpreters in the next years

  
  
These days, the drastic development of technology has provided people with a myriad of options for translating activities. While many people stated that AI and other intelligent technology tools would replace the position of translators in the future, I still strongly believe that the importance of interpreters will still be maintained in the near future.  
  
First and foremost, translation machines still make mistakes in the translating process, and could not ensure to maintain their accuracy. Specifically, AI software is prone to malfunctions, and the solutions available for people now are not foolproof. Furthermore, complex vocabulary and industry-specific terms can also be problematic to machine translation software. As a consequence, we could come to a statement that there is no evidence for a robotic translation machine being able to perform better than a well-educated interpreter. For instance, hosts of netizens today are familiar with using online translating software, named Google translate due to their free access, amazing speed and a wide selection of languages that are available for the users. However, as this website is free of charge, its translating products are only acceptable for looking up some words or translating some basic sentences. In terms of interpreting a contract, academic paper or a conversation with native speakers, people had better resort to the assistance of a translator as it seems that humans are able to catch up with and tackle the situation more flexibly than programmed machines of applications.  
  
Secondly, although translating and artificial intelligence software can be recalibrated or programmed to translate words, phrases, and language patterns, they could not fully comprehend humor, sacastims, human emotions, and other extra linguistic nuances. Thus, these platforms also fail to deliver original ideas of the author to the general public which might bring about a drastic change in the meaning of the text or speech. An apparent example for this incident is Automatic speech recognition (ASR), which is utilized to help with live speeches but its translations are unable to offer high-quality products for people. In fact, ASR programme has such a hard time to cope with spontaneous, continuous and context-dependent speech compared to the productivity of a cabin translator.  
  
In brief, there are some people who hold a view that the future of translation looks rather gloomy because of the continual introduction of translation tools, however, it is still not enough for us to predict the scenario of the disappearance of translators. This is due to the fact that translating programs are still confronted with insufficient precision accompanied by their failure when conveying the meaning of the speech or text through the employment of the author's attitude and other artistic methods.
The writer has totally missed the point of a task 2 essay. The discussion is all about creating a short but comprehensive discussion within 40 minutes. Based on the time allotment and editing requirements, He should only be presenting a maximum of 300 words. It need not be an academic paper in length. A simple everyday discussion that develops simple reasons will suffice in receiving a passing score. Extra long essays are more prone to scoring penalties. Keep it short next time.  
  
Do not change the response format. This is not a measured response essay. It is a simple agree or disagree consideration. The incorrect response format will cause accuracy penalties. That is too bad because the reasoning basis of the writer's - is quite strong and could very well have helped increase the score along with the solid interpretation of the prompt topic.  
  
The essay also risks getting an automatic failing score due to the lack ofa proper concluding summary. Instead of delivering the required reverse paraphrase, the writer continued the discussion instead, leaving the essay without a recap closing paragraph.
## Films were produced by big companies in the past, but today people are able to make a film

  
  
Recently the phenomenon aroused wide concern about the ability of making films by individuals instead of by big companies. This writing would argue that the benefits of this trend are greatly more significant than the drawbacks it has.  
  
One benefit of this trend is that independent filmmakers may explore their hidden talents in film industry. In other words, those who have a passion for media, particularly in making movies, may not have a chance to pursue professional careers. When embarking on making films by their own, they can realize their ability and it allows them further opportunities. Another positive aspect is that independent filmmakers can express themselves freely. To be specific, filmmakers by individuals do not have to allow the same demands that big box office films have to. For example, those who make films independently do not follow the stereotypes or the motifs that are old-fashioned.  
  
Despite these benefits, many people still claim that the movies which were not produced by big companies can be at low-quality. They may believe that independent filmmakers are not able to afford to buy cutting-edge devices such as digital cameras with high performance or having camera crews to set up before filming. However, I would argue that this trend can create a competitive market so that major producers have to work hard to produce high-quality movies. In more detail, this forces all producers to be more creative and make impressive films which contain innovative contents or outstanding messages in order to satisfy their audience's taste.  
  
In conclusion, the merits of this trend certainly surpass it demerits. Not only hidden talents can be discovered by also the freedom to deliver what independent producers want. Moreover, the worry about the quality of films is not a concerning issue as many people claim.
One cannot say that the topic has created a great concern since it does not carry a negative meaning. A concern is related to something of serious importance that carries a heavy result upon a person. This is an exaggerated realelement that does not follow the flow and implied meaning of the orginal topic. seeing as how a direct question was posed before the writer, his C must be presented clearly in the first person point of new. He must be an active voice in the discussion to indicate a direct response, within the expected format, to the task. This sort of writing does not lend itself to a general discussion format. The response is also altered from the original question which is "is this a positive or negative development?". There is a different prompt style for advantages v. disadvantages and benefits and drawbacks. The writer needs more response format familiarity to learn how to properly respond to the questions. The answer format must be correct to receive the correct scoring consideration.  
  
To keep the response in the correct format, the reasoning paragraphs need to use alternate words to positive such as clear, conclusive, factual, and sure. Benefits, merits, demerits do not qualify as alternative words. When words are used in a method not applicable to its meaning within he discussion requirement, the LR score will be adversely affected.
IELTS Test - Task 2  
  
TOPIC:  
***It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject.***  
## What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

  
  
Nowadays, it is experienced that students are not likely to choose science subject for studying in many countries. This can stem from many causes, which can give rise to several issues.  
  
There are a number of factors responsible for reasons why science subject has not been chosen by students. Firstly, science subject brings numerous difficulties to students. It demands they a good memory with a wide range knowledge, which make students can hardly approach. As a result, students, especially those who reckon that science subject like biology, chemistry, ... is not suitable for them, they may feel tired and do not get anything left in their brains after being lectured. Another cause could be that science subjects are not necessary in these days. Nowadays, jobs do not require the science knowledges than back in the day, so that students tend to choose another way to gain their learning by others easier subjects.  
  
Doing this, however, can lead to several problems. First of all, jobs that require other subjects or social knowledges could be more competitive. Most students choose soft subjects to study because it does not demand a large amount of knowledge, and after graduation, they compete with each other to look for a job. Consequently, it will lead to an increase of unemployment rate in the future. Another issue could be that career would be more imbalanced. Social jobs like business, education, ... will lack job opportunities for students. On the other hand, scientific jobs like investigation, doing research ... will become redundant in the future.  
  
In conclusion, students does not choose science subject to study for several reasons and this can result in a number of issues.
The prompt restatement has an unchanged phrase from the orginal text that will negatively affect the TA scoring consideration. The prompt restatement must be a totally new telling of the given topic. By presenting it within the measures of your own understanding, the examiner will be able to assess and score your basic English comprehension skills. A major part of the comprehension consideration is connected to your direct response to the given questions as well. The lack of proper summarized responses to the questions does not help with the necessary comprehension assessment. Repeating the questions shows a paraphrasing ability. It does not prove comprehension skills.  
  
The writer shows a lack of proper sentence structuring skills. His GRA score will be adversely affected by his incorrect use of punctuation marks. Proper education with regards to how punctuation macks are used is a must. He must understand that punctuation marks are used one ata time. These are never used successively in a sentence.He will receive a failing score in this section that will prevent the essay from receiving a final passing score.
## Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

  
  
That picture shows the transparent surey to change temperture. Used the closed box and sun rays to let air and water become warm.  
  
The nature energy activity. The test can enhass on wram water power. Even can use it to future building. Box and pipe metal is a importent part can change to inprove effect. Installing in one wall which face the wind let insider getting warm in winter.  
  
Be oppsive. the green air-con can affect by this base rule.  
  
IF the surey is enough powerful. Solar panel can change the energy to be gthereen.  
the earth is not getting hurt.  
  
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The essay will automatically recieve a failing task score because it did not meet the minimum 150 word requirement. The lacking wordcount is just too insurmountable to allow this essay to receive a passing score. There will also be a failing score applied to the C + C section as there is neither cohesiveness nor coherence to be found in the statements. The writer writes in broken English without knowing how to form proper English sentences, resulting in failing L R and GRA scores. There is nothing positive to be said about this presentation. The writer must enroll in ESL classes to help him improve overall. By starting his basic English language lessons now, he may be ready to take the IELTS test sometime next year.
## households accommodation in England and Wales

  
  
The bar chart compares the rate of households owning and renting amenities in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.  
  
Overall, it can be observed that households marginally favored renting accommodation over owning accommodation between 1918 and 1961. By contrast, the proportion of households in owned accommodation was virtually higher than that in rented accommodation from 1918 till the end of the period shown.  
  
From the beginning, households renting took dominance, with a support rate of nearly 80% in 1991, which was almost 4 times higher than that of households owning. Subsequently, the percentage of households renting gradually went down, but the rise in households owning continued. As a result, the figure for these two types of households had a balanced rate of 50% of each.  
  
Over the following 30 years, the proportion of households owning reached 69% in 2001 after a steady increase. While renting households experienced the opposite trend, reaching around 30% in 2001, which was three times lower than in 1918. There were nearly no changes over the next decade, but there was a minor drop in households owning and a slight rise in households renting.  
  
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The word meaning for accomodation is not the same as the word amenities. So that is an LR error in the presentation that will cost the writer in terms of scoring. The writer must familiarize himself better with word meaning and alternative word usage. Just because a word sounds applicable, does not mean that it is applicable. Always double check the word meaning before applying it to the written work.  
  
Comparison paragraphs must start from 1918 as these are the starting points for the presentation. The presentation tends to not have a solid comparison trend within the paragraphs, making these difficult to follow. The writer must assess how he wants to write the report in each paragraph, focusing in a specific presentation style, prior to drafting it. After drafting, he must think of how he can further tighten the presentation for clarity. Learn to group the discussions.
## self employment

  
  
*Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?*  
  
Answer:  
The structure of employment is being changed with the expansion of population. Indeed, rather than working for a company or organization, many people are going for self-employment. This essay will discuss about the reasons behind this, including reduced number of jobs and flexibility in working in own environment, and the disadvantages of the decision.  
  
Self-employment gives an individual the maximum flexibility possible in professional life. A typical employee has to take permission from his boss to take a leave, while a self-employed person can take it anytime because he is the boss of his workplace. This opportunity enables a self-employed person lead his life flexibly, resulting in increased efficiency and peace of mind for him. Meanwhile, he does not have to take stress about job availability, although it has become an alarming issue. Since a self-employed person can start working alone for himself, reduction of job circular will not make him worried.  
  
However, working alone comes with two major disadvantages. First of all, it has some potential risk of losing investment. While working for a company, a employee gets his salary on a regular basis and he doesn't have to invest anything for that, except time. Any loss of the company will be taken care by the share holders. But in case of self-employment, one has to invest some money to grow his business. While it brings an opportunity to get revenue, it also brings some risk. He has to bear the loss if anything goes wrong. Moreover, too much self-employemnt brings greater competition in the market. When there are too many people in the market providing similar services, it becomes difficult for the providers to keep a hold of customers.  
  
To conclude, people are choosing self-employment nowadays because it reduces stress about the job market and brings flexibilty in life. It also comes with potential risk and competition in the market which one has to be careful of.
Keep your personal opinion to yourself. Do not use it as the introduction to the topic in the prompt restatement. The prompt restatement is altered when compared to the original when you do that. The representation no longer carries the correct information output as the you have indicated information not linked to the original idea. It is also important for the TA score, that is based on the clear opinion of the writer, that you respond directly to the questions provided. The direct responses help meet the task accuracy requirement and allows the examiner to judge how well you understood the discussion requirements. They do not give scores for merely repeating the questions in the form of a direct statement. This current statement has adhered to the discussion instructions only once out of the expected response forms.  
  
The discussion format is also incorrect as the writer strayed from the discussion focus which is the disadvantages of being self-employed. As referenced in the relevant paragraph, he had 2 reasons to discuss as the disadvantage. These should have been thoroughly discussed over 2 relevant paragraphs. There was no need to discuss the advantage. That irrelevant presentation needlessly lengthened the presentation. A futile exercise since it will not be scored and the irrelevant paragraph word count will be deducted from the overall word count. Falling under the 250 minimum count will result in percentage deductions.
I am not sure that one would want to unlearn obedience. For all the reasons you presented, one thing remains clear about it. Obedience is necessary so that the concept of law and order can exist. Without obedience to law war would continue to range on a large scale at different levels. Do not discuss unlearning obedience in general. Be specific about what sort of obedience you would want to unlearn. You wish to unlearn "cultural obedience".  
  
The reference to "Black" people in this essay is offensive and politically incorrect. The proper descriptive term for the race is "African American". Only they may refer to their race as "Black". It is considered disrespectful for other races or skin color to call them "Black".
***Topic: In some countries, schools are open till late so that children can be looked after when parents are at work.***  
## Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

  
  
Essay: Schools in several nations stay open late so that children can be cared for while their parents are at work. This essay will look at both advantages and disadvantages of the statement.  
  
On the plus side, it is critical for parents to work in order to improve their financial situation, which will benefit their toddlers in the future. There are, however, countless schools care for children while their parents are at work. In almost countries, school hours are from 8 a.m to 4 p.m, but after that, children are left at home with no one to supervise them. Parents, on the other hand, have no concerns about their children when they are at shool and under the supervision of a teacher. Futhermore, students study a variety of exercises and participate in a variety of games, all of which are beneficial to their health and fitness.  
  
On the other hand, there are a slew of negative consequences for children who spend too much time in school. First of all, it is too expensive for parents, and some cannot afford such exorbitant costs. In the long run, having children away from them is inconvenient, and new borns have less time to engage with their parents.  
  
In short, I believed when both parents work and no one is at home to care for the children, the children suffer. About the cost element, parents can see the benefits that apply to them and make specific decision based on the scenario.  
  
**Please give me feedbacks and corrections on my essay, thank you.**
The prompt restatement is a problem because it contains too much of the original keywords, phrases, and references to be judged as revised or rewritten by the exam taker. By showing that he can only use cut and paste sections for his writing, the writer's TA score will have to be a failing one. He must always restate the topic in his own words, never using any of the original words. Without direct topic references for the advantage and disadvantage, the writer fails to present a clear opinion. A repeated discussion instruction will not receive a score. Only direct topic foundations will receive considerations.  
  
A toddler does not attend school yet. The most they attend is daycare. Which is not the same set- up as a school. This is a wrong synonym usage that will negatively affect the LR and C + C score. The writer needs to build his vocabulary to help him score better in these sections.  
  
The conclusion should be a recap of the overall discussion The writer did not dothat. Instead he offered an unwarranted personal opinion, which will not be scored as it is a prompt alteration. It will result in a reduced score instead.