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**TED SUmmary - A new way to grow bone (Molly Stevens)**  
  
As Intellegent society, researchers have utterly been struggling to minimize suffering from dangerous disease including Diabetes, cancer, even heart disease. Fortunately, Human body has fascinating materials with their own specification and function. Regarding to Molly Stevens, head of bio-material laboratory, suggested that there are great number of bio-materials come from the body which can be integrated and adapted to the other part. Compare to man-made substance, in term of healing progression, bio-moterial has much more adaptable. Initiaded by S.H. Ridley, ophthalmologist, who had founded the exceptionally element within the eye which is not causing inflammation, eventually it becomes intramocular lense as known as PMMA. Molly stevens and her teams tried to find substitution of bone for fracture cases, and they found*iliac crest* has potential to be integrated to other part of the bone because of strikingly rich of blood related to well vascularized. Hence they developed y applyibone bng many strategy and finally they got the appropriate method. The method has slightly the same as stem cell principle.
Hi Ifan..  
Here are my thoughts throws your summary.  
  
As ~~Intellegent~~ INTELLIGENT society, researchers have utterly (...) dangerous diseaseS including Diabetes, cancer, even THE heart disease.  
Regarding ~~to~~ Molly Stevens, A head of A bio-material laboratory, (...) are A great number of bio-materials (...) adapted to ~~the~~ other partS. ~~Compare~~ COMPARING to man-made substance, (...),THE bio-~~moterial~~ MATERIAL has much more adaptable. ~~Initiaded~~ INITIATED by S.H. Ridley, (...) the exceptional~~ly~~ (ADJECTIVE AND NOUN ARE A PAIR) element within the eye (...) it becomes ~~intramocular~~ INTRAMOLECULAR lens~~e~~ as known as PMMA  
  
... tried to find A substitution of bone for fracture (...) iliac crest ~~has~~ AS potential to be integrated to THE other partS of the bone ...  
Hence, they developed y applyibone bng many strategy(Pay Attention to your spelling) and finally they got ...  
The method has ~~slightly~~ the same as stem cell principle.  
  
Note: Hopefully, before you upload yours, you are supposed to reread. There are plenty of misspellings.  
Happy Writing
**TED : teach every child about food**  
  
In that video, The speaker, James Oliver, talked about the importances of children to learn healthy food. First of all, He said that in recent years many people do not realize that a food which they consume everyday harms their body health such as obesity and blood sugar disease. Moreover, some people do the strict diet to solve those problems. In fact, instead of undertaking it, this activity precisely aggravates their condition and even causes the death. In this case, fast food has the greatest responsibilty affecting many problems in fitness of humans. Nowadays, Fast food is also commonly consumed by school children as it is considered simpler than the parents have to prepare their children food. For instance, the number of children bought pizza for breakfast, and french fries as a their snack. Whereas, those foods contain the amount of additives and ingridients which is not good for their health. The speaker said that Americans have to make a change in life with learning a basic cooking. In addition, parents need to give more attention to their children food. Then, a person is able to teach three people about cooking and then they can continue it to others. Eventually, all of people will involve in this action and give the best effect for children.
Hi, Aris05  
I love to read your review  
here some advice to improve your writing  
  
In that video, ~~The~~the speaker, James Oliver, ...  
First of all, ~~He~~he said that in recent years many ...  
  
strict diet = poor diet  
  
Nowadays, ~~Fast~~fast food is also commonly consumed  
  
For instance, the number of children ~~bought~~ bring pizza for breakfast, ...  
  
:: focus on the capitalization  
  
Best wishes
**TED Summary: Why you Should Talk to Strangers by Kio Stark**  
  
In many parts of the world, people are raised to believe that stranger is dangerous. But, Kio stated that most strangers are not dangerous and we have erased the assumption and category about other people. Categorise people in physical appearance like black, white, Asian is not valid and we have seen another people as an individual.  
  
When someone wishes talks to stranger one thing important is to realise about the culture where you live in. In several countries, people have more privacy and get annoyed if annoyed if you talk to them. In other countries, it is rude to ignore people and you should build a conversation. Kio stated that in many unwritten rules in the world maybe break rule a bit can help someone build up a conversation. Talk to a dog or baby also a kind of practice to improve your courage.
Hello yonathan  
Hope you doing well, lemme give you some suggestion  
  
==> In many parts of the world (you can also use--> any parts, or in the worldwide) , people are raised (tended) to believe that stranger is dangerous.  
  
==> But (in the opposite or on the other side or by contrast) , Kio stated that most (...) we have (to) erased the assumption and (the) category about(of) other people.  
  
==> ~~Categorise (categorize) people in physical (...) is not valid~~(Categorize people in physical appearance such as black or white is not proper)(Asian (people) cannot juxtaposed with black or white (colour) due to both of word had different meaning) and we have(to) see~~n~~ another people as an individual.  
  
==> When someone wishes(-->eager) (to) talks to stranger(,) one ~~thing~~ important (thing) is to ~~realise about the culture where you live in.~~ (adapt to the cultures where you stand on/ live in)  
  
==> In several (-->few, certain) countries, people have ~~more~~(a tight privacy) and easily getting annoyed (--> disturbed, upset) if ~~annoyed if you~~(if someone) talk to them.  
  
==>In other countries, it is rude(not polite/ impolite) to ignore people(someone) and you should (have to) build a conversation.  
==>Talk(ing) to a dog or baby also ...  
  
Good luck and keep writing :)
... strangers are not ~~**dangerous**~~ and we have erased the ...  
Categorise people in physical appearance ~~**like**~~**such as** black, white, **or** Asian ~~**is**~~**are** not valid and we have seen ...  
  
**firstly, avoid the repeatation word, like you say "dengerous" two times.**  
**secondly, if you want you say some types, use "such as" if more than two things.  
thirdly, keep using "or" "and" or any FANBOYS conjunction for you connect the words.  
last, be careful with singlur and plural also "is" or "are"**  
  
When someone wishes ~~talk~~~~s~~**talking** to stranger one thing ...  
**you should use gerund if you have two verb in one sentence.**  
note: keep writing and go ahead.
Hey Yonathan  
These following correction for you:  
.., people are raising~~ed~~ to believe that stranger is dangerous. But (use an advance conjunction ), Kio,simple descrption of KIO , stated that most strangers are not dangerous and we have ... (This sentence is hard to understand ). Categori~~se~~ (categorize ) ~~people~~ (avoid repetition people: denizen, citizen, etc) ~~in~~into physical appearance like black, ...  
  
When someone wishes to talk~~s~~ to ~~stranger~~ ()foreign one thing important is to ~~realise~~realize (miss spelling will ruin your score even) about the culture (...) and get annoyed if annoyed if (???? ) you talk to them.  
  
... and you should ~~build a~~make conversation. Then he also stated that in many  
  
**Bearing in your mind about repetition, use appropriate word, you have sometimes to use a correct collocation, pay attention for miss spelling**  
  
Thanks  
Hope it is useful for you  
Best Regard  
Ifan21
Hai, Yonathan. here are my thoughts  
  
~~But~~However , Kio stated that most strangers ...  
  
most strangers are not dangerous ~~and~~. We have erased both the assumption and category ...  
  
~~Categorise people~~People category in physical appearance ~~like~~such as black, white, Asian is ...  
  
That's it. I wish it could be useful.  
Best Regard
**The Advantages and Disadvantages Take a Job between School and University**  
  
These days, many students do not continue their study directly after graduated from Senior High School or University because they want to make experiences in working activity. And also, some people suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. However, it has pros and cons about this decision, which one should you do after graduated.  
  
People who agree to find job before entering school or university believe that if they working first before continue their study, they have a lot of experiences in working areas. It can increase their skills and ability about many things that they do not know before. For instance, when they tried to work in companies which has reputable name, it makes us more common in offices area and also our name in many offices is more famous one. Secondly, you have scholarship from your company to give you chance for entering the next level of your education background. It is important to you because it help you to save much money to use it for other things. As such, you still continue your study within spend much money for it. However, as contradiction opinion about this statement, some people believe that you have to continue your study first before entering school or university because educational background is more important on this era.  
  
All in all, even a lot of advantages and disadvantages about take a job before entering school or university, I prefer choose to find a job first before continue our study because it makes you have more experiences in working activity. And also it helps you to increase your skills and capability about everything that you cannot find in school or university.
Hi..  
I have some suggestions for you..  
  
... or university believe that if they ~~working first~~[work] before ~~continue~~[continuing] their study,  
  
[when] you have scholarship from your company to give you chance ~~for entering~~[to enter] the next level ...  
It is important ~~to you~~ because it help you to save much money [and] [you can] to use it for other things.  
  
I hope it helps..
There really is only one ocean, consisting of five component basins that are called the Atlantic, the Pacific, the Indian, the Arctic, and the Southern. Each of these five, while generally referred to as oceans in and of themselves, are really and truly a part of a single, massive body of water, one ocean which defines the very face of planet Earth.  
  
The ocean covers roughly 71% of Earth's surface, some 360 million square kilometres. The ocean represents 97% of Earth's total water content. On top of all that, the ocean contains upward of 99% of the world's biosphere. In fact, with roughly 50% of the world's population living within 100 kilometres of the coastline and with most of the remainder living close enough to lakes, rivers, or swamps, all of which ultimately lead to the ocean, virtually every single person on the planet has the opportunity to influence the general health and nature of the world ocean.
Hi Erwin  
Let me give you some advice...  
  
There ~~really~~ is only one ocean, consisting of ...  
  
... the ocean contains upward ~~of~~(to) 99% of the world's biosphere.  
... the world's population ~~living~~ within 100 kilometres of (...) all of ~~which~~ ultimately lead to (...) person on the planet ~~has~~ (have) the opportunity to influence ...  
  
Nice summary...  
Keep writing...
Hi erwiin1,  
I have some advice for you  
  
- .., some 360 million square ~~kilometres~~**kilometers**.  
- On top of ~~all~~ that, the ocean contains ...  
- In fact, ~~with roughly~~**around** 50% of the world's population living within 100 ~~kilometres~~**kilometers** of the coastline and ~~with~~ most of the remainder (...), or swamps ~~all of~~ which ultimately lead to ...  
  
Good job  
Hope it helps :)
Hi erwin, here are my thoughts  
  
..., consisting of five ~~component~~ basins component that are called the Atlantic  
  
Each of these five, ~~while~~ generally referred to as oceans ...  
  
... 97% of Earth's total of water content.  
  
... 50% of the world's population are living within 100 kilometres ...  
  
That's it, i wish it could be useful.  
Best regard
**Powerful Hurricane Matthew Threatens Haiti, Jamaica and Cuba**  
  
One of the tremendous hurricanes, called Matthew, was going to surge Haiti and it was on fourth grade for dangerous level. Thus, the hurricane moved at 145 mph which was expected to reach Haiti on Monday and Cuba on Tuesday. To overcome this disaster, The authorities of haiti had taken the practical anticipation. They had set more than 1,300 emergencies shelter which were able to accomodate more than 340,000 inhabitants. The recent information of matthew hurricane was broadcasted by radio as well, while the rescuers warned the society directly. After passing Jamaica and Haiti, the storm was predicted to destroy Cuba. To anticipate the number of victims, the government moved approximately 500 families to the Florida by military planes. They also established the shelter emergencies in some places.
**Powerful matthew hurricanes threaten Jamaica.**  
  
Recently there was occurs an extremely hurricane in jamaica it called matthew hurricane, and this was a powerful storm, they were reached the top classification, category 5 becoming in felix in 2007. The gale move slowly through caribean on Sunday, and lead to the atlantic. Whereas run was already fall in jamaica it will give big whorst effect in those area. Based on storm observer, matthew hurrican will be predicted had winds of 145 mph (230kph), it will be causes big disaster in around jamaica.  
  
During the hurrican occur, government had anticipation to evacuates all of civilisation, they were build sehlters area to give accomodation the refugee, and total of shelters can be hold up approximately 340.000 people in an area. While government anticipate the storm, it was caused more loss to the jamaican, such as broke homes, office, hospital and others facility. New york times reporter present the information, it was big and powerfull gale in the recent history but there was no victim in this experiences.
Hello Bams, i have some advises within your writing. Feel free for correct me too.  
  
Recently there was ~~occurs~~ an extremely....  
*Recently **years,** there was **occurred** an extremely....*  
  
....~~this~~ was a powerful storm.....  
*....**it** was a powerful storm...*  
  
.....~~they were~~ reached the top classification....  
*.........**which** reached the top classification....*  
  
.......it ~~will give~~ big ~~whorst~~ effect in those area.  
*......it **gives** big **worst** effect in those area.*  
  
Keep practice and writing!
Hi..  
I found many corrections but there are too many to explain..  
you should try to put the better grammar..  
  
Recently there ~~was occurs an extremely~~[was an occurrence of extreme] hurricane in ~~j~~[J] amaica ~~it~~[which is] called matthew hurricane, and this was a powerful storm~~,~~[.] >use fullstop< they ~~were~~ reached the top classification, category 5 ~~becoming~~[just directly followed by preposition, you do not need to write becoming anymore] in felix in 2007.  
  
Keep writing..
One of the world's powerful women in this world by Forbes Magazine comes from Indonesia. She is Sri Mulyani Indrawati who as Finance Minister and former of World Bank Managing Director. In the opportunity of The Jakarta Post to have an interview with her, it was amazing with her telling myriad stories travelling around the world and has effects about decrease poverty in resource-rich but poor countries. "The World Without Poverty" that World Bank's slogan travelling around in her thought every day in former her headquarter in New York City, USA. That's taught her about humanity and optimism as asset of human.  
  
As Republic of Indonesia Finance Minister in Susilo Bambang Yudhoyono's era, Sri was labeling as "Indonesian Iron Lady" due to helped this country from economic transition by Asian Financial Crisis in 1998's. Nowdays, she came back to Indonesia in the same place with different president. She said she would not take for granted for being Finance Minister again taking into consideration in the fact that she known Indonesia's economic issue and institution. Those do not mean she can tackle everything. Now, she concentrated with Tax Amnesty of Indonesia and gaining her target.
According to the result from loved-least world competition, Mosquito is the most favorite animal because the mosquito's ability to carry the parasites that cause human diseases. Zika, Malaria, Dengue are the human disease that are carried by Mosquito. All of them are top-line deadly disease in the world. Because of that reason, some people think if this deadly mosquito disappear, the world becomes better. Some scientist who have field study in genetic engineering, make a research to modified male A. aegypti to become sterile, and the result was released in Brazil. Mosquito is the main object for gene drives while It was increased the investment funding for the research. Gene drives have to cope with animal that carried human diseases parasites, such as mosquito or bat. Opponent people though that gene drive was less morally action if it used to eliminate a species while impact from disappearing that species is unpredictable. Reversibility and consent were two main principles that were obeyed by genetic engineers.
Hi! I have some advice for you  
  
....competition, Mosquito... Do not put uppercase in the middle of the sentence except it is necessary, for example name of person, country, and disease. You can find the rest of the uppercase use in the literature. So it should be  
  
*...competition, mosquito...*  
  
... because the mosquito's ability to carry the parasites ... Avoid redundancy! You mention mosquito twice in your sentence. It should be  
  
... because it's ability to carry the parasites causing diseases to human.  
  
Zika, Malaria, Dengue are the human disease that ... The meaning of this sentence is pretty similar with the sentence before, so you just need to compile both. So it should be  
  
*Mosquito is the most favorite animal because it's ability to carry the parasites causing diseases to human for instance Dengue, Malaria, and Zika.*  
  
...make a research to modified... Remember the using of to+infinitive, so it should be  
  
*...make a research to modify*
Hello sasariri, this is some corrections for me. And feel free to correct my writing too, thanks  
  
......because ~~the mosquito's~~ ability to carry........  
*.......because **its** ability to carry.......*  
  
All of them are top-line deadly disease......  
*All of them are **the** top-line deadly disease.....*  
  
...some people think if this deadly mosquito disappear...  
*...some people think **that** if deadly mosquito disappear...*  
  
Some scientist who have ~~field study~~ ......  
*Some scientist who have **studied**......*  
  
Keep practice and writing!
***Some suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.***  
  
There are several pros and cons toward the issue of what should young people do directly after graduated from high school. Some people prompt adolescent to take a job for a few years before applying university. In my point of view, it is better for the youth graduated recently to focus on their education rather than to get a job.  
  
The viewpoints that agree to the statement think the experience that adolescent obtained by working before continuing study is greater. However, the only good impact comes from this stand are the experience of earning money. In addition, there is another possibility advantage by working before continuing college is the salary can be used to fund their education if they can manage it well.  
  
Meanwhile, there are several drawbacks for adolescent obtained by working before continuing study. First, they will potentially become lazy to continue their education because they already earn money. Second, they waste their time by working at young age and having small income. The objective of getting higher education is to earn more money. The lower the education they have, the lower the salary they get. Third, it will be very pity for them to attain inappropriate job because their high school academic title will not fit to run some fancy positions. It is a general fact that almost every company looking for the employees who have degree.  
  
All in all, I completely disagree to the stand who suggests young people should take a job for a few years between school and university because the disadvantage of taking this option is preponderant. However, the adolescent can reach more experiences and potentially get reasonable income after having a degree.
The line graph presents how many students who registered in language and science courses at Redbrick College of Higher Education during the ten-year period. Overall, the students are more and more enthused to follow the language class than the science class d. The science course did not experience a significant change in the number of students in the same period while the number of students who enrolled in the language class had an upward trend.  
  
In the first year, there were 98 students who followed in science class, about a half more than the number of students in language class. We can see that the initial number of students experienced a gradual increase and reached in peak at 118 students in the next two years, while the latter numbers showed the reverse and fell to 35 students. However, the next year onward until year 7 presented that the students in the science class plummeted to 85 students whilst the number of students in the language class increased dramatically to 85 students. In this time, both had a same number of students.  
  
The language students have been an increase number and reached at 105 students from year 7 to present. It was different from the science students who have been fluctuated, falling to over 50 students in year 8 and up to 95 students at present, ten students less than the language students.  
  
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Hans Rosling was launching a brand new analog teaching technology that he picked up from the box. the blue box contains one billion people that were for the industrialized world, and the green box has two billion people that were for developing countries. There was a big gap between the one billion in the industrialized world and the two billion in the developing world where In the industrialized world, people were healthy, educated, rich, and they had small families, but in developing countries was contrast , in the developing world was far away, the aspiration of the average family there was to have food for the day and they were saving to be able to buy a pair of shoes.  
  
But the world has changed, and it's overdue to upgrade that mindset and that taxonomy of the world and to understand it. The years ahead the development of the world's population will continue to increase that it can be done, the population can have a much more just world with green technology and with investments to alleviate poverty.
Hello,  
Lemme give you some suggestion  
  
==> Hans Rosling ~~was launching~~(had launched) a brand new analog teaching ...  
==> the blue box contain~~s~~ (ed) one billion people ~~that were~~ for the industrialized world, and the green box ~~has~~ (had) two billion people ~~that were~~ for developing countries.  
  
==> There was a big gap between [...] be able to buy a pair of shoes.(this sentence is too long, you can divide into two sentences)  
  
==> .., and it's overdue to upgrade ~~that~~(the) mindset and ~~that~~ (the) taxonomy of the ...  
  
Good luck and keep writing :)