dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
## export between The US and Vietnam

  
  
The Pie chart illustrates exchange of various goods worth million$ between The USA and Vietnam. Overall, in exchange business from Vietnam to The US contribution of coffee is highest and that of garments and other goods is lowest. In goods transported from The US aircrafts parts seems to make to the top of the list and car to the bottom.  
  
Coffee accounts for about quarter of the goods exported to The US ,which is the highest. Rice and Seafood share similar value in exchange business to The US of around 4.3 and 4.4$millions respectively. The export business of fruits and vegetables is around 16$million from Vietnam .Lowest among all goods transported are garments and some miscellaneous products valuing of about 2$million.  
  
Aircraft parts are the highest valued (72$million) product exported from The US. Vietnam also imports machinery and other products of worth of 30.5$million and 35$million respectively. The least value is added by car to the export business which is of around 6$million. Fertilizers contribute 16$million and cotton around 12$million to the exchange business.  
  
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The writer inappropriately identifies the comparison images. The inaccuracy lies in the number of images stated and its representative measurements. The overview is confusing to the reader, who cannot see the images as the information content is obviously meant for more than one image. Incorrect reference points have a deduction effect on sectional scoring as it reduces the correctness of the restated reference points. The second sentence in reference to the trend can also use a better sentence structure for clarity sake. Proper use of punctuation marks would have provided that needed format.  
  
A clear identification of the currency type and internationally accepted currency writing format should have been provided. There are several versions of the dollar internationally and businessowners prefer a clear currency reference to guide them. In this case the US dollar should have been used in the following format:  
  
US $ XXX .XX  
  
This is the more widely standardized and accept currency writing method. The current writing style is in the European format which is normally confusing for non-Europeans to read. Since the essay is meant for a general audience, the more commonly used format should be indicated to help avoid reader confusion.
***There is ample evidence that increased car use contributes to global warming and has other undesirable effects on human health and well-being.***  
## What can be done to prevent people from using their cars?

  
  
Car usage has grown significantly over the years, bringing increase mobility to those who owns cars but many problems to the society. This essay will explore how better urban planning and investment in public transport can reduce car usage.  
  
Any strategy to reduce car usage must be able to provide the same level of accessibility that cars offer. While no other form of transport can offer this, investment in a holistic public transport infrastructure more people can be persuaded to use mixed mode transportation by walking, cycling and public transport. For example, bike racks at railway stations, park and ride terminals and multi-modal public transport terminals can offer a seamless journey for commuters.  
  
For decades, many of the cities have been planned and built to around a car centric lifestyle. The growth of car ownership has enabled businesses, shops and other institutions to locate farther away from urban centers. Misguided government policies and zoning rules have regularly promoted this to drive business growth, citing cheaper land values and availability of larger lots. However, this has perpetuated the dependency on cars as most of these sites can be reached conviniently only with cars. Mixed land use policies, which incorporate residential and commercial developments can result in drastic reduction in the distances people have to travel. Extension of pedestrian friendly infrastructure and bicycle lanes would also encourage commuters to ditch cars for more eco-friendly transport modes. Perceived difficulties in walking and cycling can be overcome by investing in better and wider pavements, installing more street lighting and putting up more benches.  
  
In summary, investments in urban planning and infrastructure are often neglected in cities, resulting in people using cars to navigate the cities. However, this has a negative impact on the environment and the citizens. It is critical that cities adopt a holistic transport, land use and urban planning strategy to make city and neighborhood more livable by reducing emissions and pollution brought about by cars.
This is just a simple opinion discussion that should be dealt with quickly but comprehensively.Think of it in terms of a classroom discussion. Professors like it and students get a better score during class recitations where the student manages to quickly explain himself in an accurate manner.The same rules apply to the task 1 essay.  
  
There is no need to overdiscuss since there are several tasks to be accomplished in the essay within 40 minutes. At this length, the writer has not really accomplished much beyond a vocabulary and grammar exercise. While the discussion is on point, it is simply too long and as such, open to accidental presentation errors. He did not completely perform the check and balance tasks either.  
  
The repetition of the discussion question is not score increasing. A direct foundation topic in response to the question was needed to clearly layout the discussion target points. It would have clearly shown the clarity of thought of the author in relation to opinion clarity scoring criteria. Repeated instructions do not meet this requirement.  
  
The conclusion is guilty of using redundant word and please references in the previous paragraphs. This will be assumed to relate to a limited vocabulary on the part of the exam taker, who has limited synonym and paraphrasing skills.  
  
What could have been a truly impressive presentation was held back by oversights on the part of the author. Keeping the essay concise will help fix that tendency on the writer's part.
***Some suggest that children do not understand the world of work and schools should make all teenagers spend a short time working as well as studying academic subjects.  
  
## To what extent do you agree?***  
  
It is argued that beside the tuition of academic subjects, schools should provide students with chances to get work experience. From my point of view, the young will benefit from this sensible movement.  
  
First off, in order to become refreshingly employable, not only do graduates acquire proper qualifications but they also need a wide range of work based skills such as networking and time management. Although students work on projects at school, which probably train them in such abilities, there are many things to be learnt on the job. For example, cooperating with colleagues is a far cry from doing assignments with friends since teenagers have no concern about earnings or promotion. Without practical experience, they might hold the false assumption that studying subjects at school is enough for work.  
  
Furthermore, getting involved in a real-life professional environment goes a long way towards directing students' career paths. Those who have not set their hearts on anything yet can find out their desires in this way. For people who have realised their ambitions, they can check whether the current choices suit them. As a result, students avoid wasting their university years on unappealing disciplines.  
  
In conclusion, it is necessary that work time account for an appropriate proportion of the curriculum, so that the young prepare themselves better for employment in the future.
The student is getting his word meanings confused. He must increase his English vocabulary and word usage understanding in order to avoid unitentional misinterpretations of the prompt topics. If he will bother to look up the word meaning difference between "suggest" and argue, he will come to understand why his interpretation of the topic and its foundational reason is incorrect.  
  
It will also serve him well to familiarize himself with the various response formats required for the task 2 essays. There are opinion essays, dis/agree essays, and measured response essays. The writer did not properly identify the response format as required (measured response) and provided another incorrect presentation in terms of his opinion.  
  
Based on these 2 first paragraph errors, the essay will start with a failing score. He did not correctly restate the prompt, nor did he provide the expected response in the presentation. The foundation of the discussion and reasoning response are invalid.  
  
While the resaoning paragraphs can be deemed as related to the original discussion question, the inaccurate representation in both the prompt restatement + personal opinion and concluding summary are what may prevent this essay from receiving a passing score in an actual setting.
## Many museums charge for admission while others are free

  
  
Human beings have been through so many crucial events both in art, politics,..., therefore, to remind and treasure what had happened in the past, museums were established all over the world. There is a school of thought believe that the entry of museums should be free for everyone, while their opponents think that the fee of ticket is resonable. In my opinion, I believe the advantage of this entry fee far outweighs its disadvantage because many museums wouldn't be able to protect their ancestral possessions without it.  
  
People who on the side of free entry into museums have their own arguments since not everyone is wealthy enough to afford the fee. For example, people have to pay 17 euros to get access to Louvre Museum, some visitors would it is would rather affordable to see to "mysterious smile" of Mona Lisa, however, it would be an economic burden for the poor, or travellers for under developing countries, those hardly pay for the cost of accommodations and food. As I already mentioned, museums are the place for people to learn new things, charging for entry could be a barrier for people to achieve new knowledge and could potentially raises a inequality among people.  
  
Despite the aforementioned disadvantages, I am still on the side that museums should be allowed to charge people when entering. The chief rationale could be the bills for other expenses. Since the displacement in museums have been collected after a long time being scattered around the world, the majority of them were not in a good conditions, consequently, the cost for reserving and storing each year is enormous. The electricity, water bills, and other costs for security and management, additionally, are noteworthy. The sales of tickets could somehow diminish the heavy burden of finance on every museums' shoulders, and could lead to better services which would satisfy customers.  
  
Moreover, to solve the problem given by the former, thanks to the development of technologies, museums are now able to hold online exhibitions which include spectacular pieces of art and clear descriptions of each masterpieces.  
  
In conclusion, although I recognize that the museums ticket sales can cause drawbacks to stakeholders in societies, I believe that museums should not remain free for all so as to be operated and developed most effectively.
The writer has over written this opinion paper. It may not be possible to complete an almost 400 word paper within 40 minutes because of the editing and proofreading that he has to complete to finalize the paper. Even without actually reviewing the content, I already saw uncorrected punctuation usage errors, grammar problems, and misused words in the overall presentation. These cumulative errors should have been spotted and corrected if the writer paid attention to the content rather than length of the essay. There has never been an exam taker who passed the test based on length of writing alone. word count does not countin any sectional scoring consideration. Proper grammar and punctuation usage, clarity of explanation , and thought conciseness heavily factor in the scoring though. These are the factors that the writer ignored when writing this essay and these will be the reason for the low score awarding in the end. Next time concentrate on being brief bbut clear, avoid grammar errors, and stick to short sentence presentations. That is how one passes this test. Quality over quantity above all else.Draft, review, edit, repeat until the time runs out. Perfect the content through brief, clear, discussions.
student accommodation in 2010 and now  
  
The maps illustrate how a student accommodation building has changed from 2010 to the present.  
Overall, there have been many significant changes in the building between 2010 and today. Looking at the maps, it can be clearly seen that the student bedrooms and the gardens have experienced extensive modification over the same time period.  
  
As can be seen from the maps, the building was a relatively green area with three gardens to the northwest, the north, and the south of the map in 2010. However, only the northern one remains unchanged in the here and now while the others were knocked down to make way for a new student bedroom and a car park. Moreover, the addition of two bedrooms brings the number of the student ones to 5, replacing the former living room.  
  
Turning to the other features, the current building has a lot of doors added to travel more easily between the rooms and the exterior. Other major changes include the instruction of an en-suite room and the construction of a new social area in the kitchen. The big bathroom in the center part of the map, however, remains at the same location.  
  
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It will do the writer well to remember that this is an interpretative essay based on provided information from a given image. The interpretation should be clear enough to the reader without having to refer to the image. The writer who asks the reader to refer to the given image will automatically lose points as he is seen as unable to properly reconstruct the image based on data reporting. The reference to a glance at the image was done twice in this essay. So the writer can expect to receive deductions for that reference. It will be minimal but still, a deduction is a deduction that will affect the final score.  
  
When referring to directions, the term used should be "area" or "location" instead of "one" since that is not a numerical reference but rather, a location marker. Wrong word references will also cause deductions in the LR score, specially when it is used incorrectly in the sentence.  
  
The explanatiion is pretty much acceptable, but problematic in presentation format and word usage. These are areas where the writer can easily improve his scores in based on the growth of his English vocabulary and his ability to remember that he is reconstructing an image for the reader, who has no access to the image at that point.
Essay topics:  
## The table below shows information about travelling to work in one US city.

  
***Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.***  
  
The given table illustrates the average distance, time, and speed of various types of transportation which people use thoughtly their commute to work in one US city. Overall, car for more than 1 person is the best means of transport for long distances, but for short distances, cycle and walk are the quickest and the least time.  
  
As can be seen from the table, it is the greatest distance for inhabitants who use car for more than one person and public transport to travel to work on average 24 or 23 miles, while cyclists or pedestrians have the lowest distance - just 4 miles. By comparison, car drivers without passengers travel an average of 17 miles.  
  
Travelling by bus or train takes the longest distance, around 49 minutes to reach work. Following by the first longest time to commute to work are cars with passengers and without passengers on average 42 or 33 minutes. Walkers and cyclists take the least amount of time because they get to work in just 20 minutes.  
  
People who drive cars together and alone tend to be the fastest transport because their speed is 34 mph 31 mph. The third fastest means of transport are bus and train. Finally, the lowest modes of transport which teach to work are cycle and by foot, at 10 mph and 3 mph respectively.
The task 1 essay should not be more than 175-200 words.That is because of the final editing and rewriting requirements that must be completed within 40 minutes. The presentation only needs a 3 paragraph presentation. The writer has over extended his writing for no reason. The shorter and more concise the writing , the better the overall scoring prospects in the end.  
  
The summary overview is not complete as a presentation. Shortened references to the types of transportation as listed in the table are missing, creating a confusing trending statement for the reader. There should also be a measurement type indicated somewhere in this mention. The summary could have been better presented in this instance.  
  
Assume that the reader cannot see the image. Refrain from asking them to look at the image Your summary report should be able to present an imaginable report based on an accurate and descriptive data presentation.
**Question**  
***Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments.  
Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit.***  
## Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

  
  
Nowadays, industry's development pushes big cities in many countries growth more, which results in the appearances of tall buildings. There are people think that governments should control the new buildings, while the others believe that people or organisations who finance the buildings have the right to freely design them as they pleased. I would like to discuss my view about this matter.  
  
On the one hand, the job of designing and commanding how to construct the building belongs to engineers. Engineers are people who have studied about constructing and they have knowledge about designing and evaluating blueprints. If they are provided with a piece of land, they will know about the pros and cons of the land and they will draw a blueprints fit with it. Constructing a building is not an easy task. Therefore, engineers are assigned to do such a job. If the engineer is a professional one, they can do their job right no matter how hard it is.  
  
On the other hand, there are a few problems to deal with if the buildings are not in management. Without proper monitor, some constructing projects will encroach more land than it suppose to have. This may results in the lack of land for some other project. Another problem is, there are people and organisations who uses land illegally. While a piece of land is not managed seriously, there are people try to utilise the holes of law to construct something without someone's notice. And when it is find out, it costs no little money to remove the building. Not only that, in several countries, there are constructing projects which have been left unprogressed for many years due to the lack of governments's management.  
  
My conclusion is, engineers are free to design buildings and to construct them as they see fit. However, at a certain level, there must be governments's management in order to ensure engineers and owners of these constructing projects abide the law of their country.
The prompt restatement was off to an illogical opening sentence. It showed a lack of proper sentence formation on the part of the writer who struggled to make the topic sentence understood. After that, he reverted to using an all too similar representation of the original prompt, to the point where it may be seen as a mere cut and paste of the original. From there, he failed to represent a clear opinion of the topic within the prompt restatement + writer's opinion paragraph. That paragraph will result in a failing TA score. Meaning the essay will have already failed, even before he started presenting his opinion paragraphs.  
  
When the essay has a "Discuss both views and give your opinion" requirement, the writer is expected to represent 3 points of view in each paragraph. The format for the paragraph asks him to write an explanation of why the public opinion is correct, by correctly using the representative pronouns throughout. That means, use third person group pronouns for the explanation of the public opinion then, using first person pronouns in the same paragraph to show his dis/agreement with the presentation. The essay cannot, as the writer has currently presented, be addressed solely from the personal opinion of the writer.  
  
The essay will fail due to the non-compliant discussion format. The concluding summary is missing from the essay since the writer used the conclusion to discuss his personal opinion. This created an open ended essay which will result in an automatic failing score. The lack of a proper summarized discussion is pivotal to the overall scoring process as it partners with the score of the prompt restatement + writer's opinion found at the beginning of the presentation.
## essay about a famous person you like

  
  
The celebrity whom I admire is a girl band named Girls' Generation. Girls' Generation is a South Korean girl group formed by SM Entertainment. The group is composed of eight members: Taeyeon, Sunny, Tiffany, Hyoyeon, Yuri, Sooyoung, Yoona, and Seohyun.  
  
They are talented at vocals. There isn't a single member in Girls' Generation who sings poorly. They all sound great.  
Being in a large group can be hard to perform the dance routine. However, they always seem to show it easy and enjoyable every time when they perform.  
  
Girls Generation or SNSD is one of the powerful girl groups in K-Pop history. They received hate from almost all other girl groups fans. The 2008 Dream Concert was a nightmare for them. When they performed at the event, the fans of other artists purposely turned off their lightsticks and made the whole stadium dark.  
  
But now they are one of the most legendary girl groups that South Korea has offered. Girls' Generation has earned the honorific nickname "The Nation's Girl Group" in their home country.
The writer did write about admiration and the reasons for it in the essay. While his basis for writing is on point, the subject/ topic of his discussion is incorrect. The writing instruction called for an explanation related to a person (singular) that he admires.  
  
He wrote about a group of people (plural) instead. He did not write the description based on the target subject. He wrote about why he admires the group rather than a person. Had he mentioned a specific person from the group, he would have met the descriptive requirements for the essay.  
  
These are the reasons why the essay cannot be considered prompt responsive even though most of the information presented responds to the question list. It cannot pass when the main discussion requirementis not met.