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## High schools should require students to wear uniforms

  
  
These days, almost every school requires students to wear a uniform instead of their own clothes. While there are many people have raised against this trend, there are good reasons for students to be compelled to wear uniform at schools.  
  
Firstly, uniform creates the similarity among students. Wearing a uniform, students will not feel unconfident or compare themselves with others only through clothes. Since students are required to wear uniforms, they do not have to worry about how they look or whether they look good as their friends. Moreover, everyone with the same look will prevent the disparity, which is unnecessary at school, especially in extracurricular activities of the school. In other words, uniforms nourish a sense of equality among students.  
  
Secondly, a uniform is promoting, convenient and affordable to most students and parents. Due to wearing an alike uniform, students do not need to compare themselves with others. Therefore, they will concentrate more on the lessons than on clothes. In addition, uniform brings convenience. Students all need to wake up and go to school early. Consequently, uniforms assist them not to have to spend much indecisive time choosing clothes. Lastly, the uniform is more affordable than many other clothes. We just need two sets of uniforms and wear them throughout the year. As a result, instead of keeping up with the latest trend in fashion, we save our money with uniforms.  
  
In conclusion, students' uniform at school represents their respect to teachers, classmates, and school. With everyone wearing the same clothes, this will shorten the distance among students.
The writer will definitely pass the task 2 essay presentation based on this particular topic. He has avoided the use of run on sentences and used transition words properly. All of the discussion topics in the individual paragraphs connect well to one another.Though the discussion is quick and to the point , these are all understandable for the most part. Except, there is one part that is not very well structured sentence-wise.  
  
a uniform is promoting, convenient and affordable to most students and parents  
Promoting what? Why should a uniform promote whatever itis? Why? This is a GRA and C + C problem. All sentences need to make clear sense to the reader when considering the connected references.  
  
For the conclusion, do not forget to restate the topic sentence before repeating the personal opinion and reasons. That will create a well rounded and properly concluded discussion summary.
**In many countries, people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could.  
## Why do you think it is? What can be done to change this?**  
  
In many nations, people do not truly focus on garbage recycling which results from several reasons. Nevertheless, reasonable solutions can be taken to tackle this problem.  
  
Obviously, the major cause of this matter is the recycling process, which is complicated and time-consuming. Even some materials are not multipurpose enough to be recycled, so it is not worthwhile for people to do this. For example, used plastic bags and paper can only be reused as decoration, which might take lots of effort for some people to think of ideas on how to recycle them reasonably, like making a gift wrap. In addition, inadequate education is also to be blame. It seems to me that most schools around the world neglect valuable lessons on the importance of recycling that people, especially the young, do not get the knowledge, probably because these lessons are considered more impractical than other subjects.  
  
Nonetheless, in order to combat this trend, it is vital that the following solutions are applied. First, schools should add more lessons about recycling to curriculums to encourage students to recycle. Teachers can show documentary for students to watch or organize competitions and games to test their understanding. Second, governments should impose laws to the public. Particularly, individuals who do not sort every type of waste materials should be heavily fined. Lastly, the governments have to make recycling facilities available everywhere too, like placing recycling cans on streets and buildings, which reminds citizens to recycle.  
  
In conclusion, complex recycling stages and lack of education are the main contributions to this matter, which can be solved by taking the steps mentions above into actions.  
  
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The restatement + response in not properly presented. While the paraphrasing is acceptable, there was a failure to deliver question responses as directly required. The examiner does not need the questions repeated. He already knows what there are. He needs to see your ability to respond quickly to discussion questions as if you were participating in a class discussion. He is judging your swift logic and reasoning skills in this section. You failed to deliver.  
  
inadequate education is also to be blame  
How does this reason relate to the first? The reasoning in this paragraph lacks cohesion. The seperate topics leave the reader confused.  
  
The solutions paragraph was again blurred by the sudden insertion of a fining sugstem. It disconnected the cohesive discussion in relation to the previously stated causes.
## In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless

  
  
Thanks to the advancement of technology, our lives are increasingly civilized and developed in many aspects, especially transportation. It has been anticipated that shortly, automated driving system will soon replace humans in operating vehicles. From my perspective, I believe that the advantages of self-driving vehicles outweigh the disadvantages due to their convenience in reducing personnel errors.  
  
Actually, there is a substantial number of people who earn their living by driving. Hence, if self-driving transports become popular, drivers will lose their jobs, which means higher social unemployment, and fewer occupational job opportunities for others. In addition, the technology is constantly updating; and during the process, some glitches can occur, code error is a case in point. Supposing there is any technical fault while driving, this will cause the accident. Furthermore, due to the use the same date and network protocol, it is very easy for hackers to collect personal data.  
  
On the other hand, I firmly believe that automated vehicles will be beneficial to benefit our lives. First, driverless transport will eliminate costly human errors as they are based on a sophisticated system. Consequently, the majority of causes of accidents, including drunkenness and distracted driving, will be lessened. In a recent survey, it has been estimated that these cars can reduce 90% of accidents. Besides, traffic jams will be reduced thanks to a similar controlled system that applies to all vehicles. Furthermore self-driving cars would be able to move efficiently at optimized distances and also provide the best route to take.  
  
In conclusion, while driverless cars have their limitations, they still have crucial advantages of changing our way of travel. In reality, I think the major challenge is how to combine fully automated vehicles and human-driven ones.
personnel  
Incorrect word reference. Personnel refers to staff members of a particular function. That is different from and often confused with the word "personal" which indicates the actions of a person such as "a personal error ".  
  
The question is one sided. since you believe and support the like that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, then the essay should offer evidence to support this theory. As such, presenting the alternate opinion first fails this presentation in 2 ways:  
  
- It creates a confusing opinion presentation.  
- It leaves the actual opinion under explained. There is not enough evidence presented to support the given point of view.  
  
Always aim to disprove the opposing opinion to help support your statement. Never say the A and D are equal in perception as you presented here.
## The Graph compares the rate of inflation and GDP in VietNam over the 12-years course from 1999 to 2011.

  
Overall, it is clear that there was an upward trend in the rate of inflation, while the GDP did not change too much during the given period. Also, both figures met at the same record in 2005.  
  
At the beginning of the period, the figures for both inflation and GDP were nearly equal, at around 5%. After that, the rate of inflation dropped by 5% while the GDP rose slightly to 7% in 2000. Over the next 6 years, the figure of inflation experienced a sharp increase and reach a peak of 25% in 2008. Meanwhile, there was a slight grew in the rate of GDP between 2001 and 2007 before dipping down to nearly 5%.  
  
The rate of inflation thereafter underwent a sharp drop to 7%, then suddenly increase again to 19% in 2011. The figure of GDP, meanwhile, had fluctuations in this stage, in 2010 the percentage increased but immediately fell to 6% in 2011.  
  
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Do not capitalize any sentence in the summary overview except for the first letter of every new sentence. Do not shout at the examiner. Use the correct variety of upper and lower case letters at all times. Keep the academic tone consistent throughout.  
  
For the summary overview, there needs to be a clear identification of the 2 line representations. As these are color coded lines, the proper differentiation in the line descriptions, and correct line type identification based on the color code adds to the clear restatement of the image data.  
  
grew  
Word choice error. The word used should have been growth as it is a past form reference.  
  
had fluctuations in this stage,  
Are you referring to a different time frame from the one mentioned in the next line? Review your presentation for reference clarity after completing the draft. Revise as needed.
## uk data on attending cinema by age

  
  
The line chart compares the share of four age groups attending cinema once a month in Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.  
  
Overall, apart from the 7-14-year-old group, three other ones experienced a vast escalation during the 17-year period. Additionally, people whose ages range between 15 and 24 took up the highest proportion, while the opposite was true for the middle-aged group.  
  
Commencing at about 18% in 1984, a massive growth was seen in the percentage of 15-24-year-old individuals, reaching its highest peak of approximately 60% in 2000. Likewise, the figure for people who are 35 or older rose gradually, from roughly 0% to relatively 15%.  
  
The 1984-2000 period witnessed a slight fluctuation in the data of adults aging 25-35, starting at about 5% then soared up by approximately 20% 10 years later, followed by a mild oscillation but rose to more than 30% in the last year. In contrast, the youngest age group experienced a record of 10% in the beginning, after which it climbed to its peak of around 38% yet fell to reach the same figure as the second-oldest one.  
  
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The writer has done the simplest reporting presentation. The report avoids a complete and accurate comparison analysis. This shortcut long sentence presentation did that. Without a properly presented individual idea sentence per paragraph, the coherence and cokeswereas of the presentation is lacking. There is no true simple and complex presentation either. So there are at least 2 points where the writer will recieve problematic scores. The writer must focus on developing written thought clarity through the proper structuring of sentences based on analytical reports. This essay is risked and focused on simple scoring considerations only. A more comprehensive piece of writing would better help the overall score. Use 3-5 sentences to meet this challenge.
IELTS Writing Task 2  
  
***Some people say History is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.  
  
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.***  
  
Essay: There is a debate whether history or some subjects like science and technology ought to be the major priorities in schools' curriculums. Despite the fact that history lessons convey many meaningful values to students, I strongly argue that science and computer subjects are more advantageous for pupils and society in the future.  
  
To begin with, historical events are part of human society. In some countries, by learning about the country's war-time, students could understand all the harshness and losses that their ancestors had to suffer in the past. Thereby, they would value the peaceful lifetime they are enjoying now. Furthermore, history lessons not only teach students about wars or political events but also provide them the overall view in a variety of aspects of life such as the economy or industrial revolution. For example, as school children study about the history of oil, they would have a deep insight into oil's original source and how oil became an important part in many today's industries. This knowledge may help students gain basic understanding about things and relate them to social issues in modern life.  
  
On the other hand, science and technology help students keep pace with cutting-edge innovations due to the ceaseless developments of the new era. Therefore, having skills to use advanced devices may create more chances for employment in different fields. Moreover, teaching scientific knowledge also acts as driving force to improve the human resource for coping with natural problems like pollution elimination or alternative energy explorations. Besides, the study of Biology and applied science has helped humans endure and outlive some fatal diseases and viruses. The COVID 19 pandemic is a clear example for this as thousands of citizens have been given vaccine doses and proper treatments with the aid of medical researches and advanced technologies.  
  
To sum up, it is true that the study of history reminds us of our humble origin, I believe that science and technology are the key that lead to the future of human beings.
The summary overview is incomplete. It must restate both public opinions before you present your personal point of view. That is the task accuracy requirement and delivering only a partial representation means a failed topic restatement. You do not want to recieve a less than passing score in this section since it will be difficult to recover from it.  
  
The reasoning discussions do not properly support the writers opinion. The contradictory opinion should be presented based on why it has public support, then, the writer should explain why this support is incorrect. The focus should be on the strength of the writers opinion when compared to other, alternate reasons. The first reasoning paragraph lacks that debate presentation.
## The idea of one government system

  
  
In recent years, a number of people reckon that an international government would perform better than the individual one and vice versa. From my perspective, the benefits of this point of view are greater than the disadvantages and this paper will provide justifications for my opinion.  
  
It is inevitable that one massive administration cannot control the world thoroughly. The more developed the world is, the harder it is to limit the criminal rate as there is only one authority and it has to take care of various aspects. Therefore, the delinquency level such as smuggle, transport drugs occurs more frequently which will shed a shadow on the security of the whole world.  
  
On the other hand, several advantages can be recognized if the international administration replaces a particular one. Firstly, numerous shared issues, especially environmental problems, can be tackled more easily since there is only one authority existing and operating. Only thanks to the concerted efforts of the whole world, do profound problems such as global warming or climate change get better. As a result, a unified government plays a vital role in solving the problems which the world is suffering from recently. Moreover, it will get easier for people to travel here and there if one authority comes to power. Due to the unification of leadership, the borders between countries will be wiped out which facilitates transportation. Consequently, this will provoke trade and tourism between regions which leads to the flourishing of the world's economy.  
  
In conclusion, the system of one government is a novel idea and to me, we can benefit from it strongly. However, the politicians should implement plausible measurements if this system comes into real life.
Use a single % defense for this discussion. since you were asked for your opeman, the foundation off the discussion must be based on 1 merits of the system you support. so the first reasoning paragraph is not considered as a part of a properly developed discussion. The second paragraph that supports the opinion will be considered instead. This partially developed response may not reach a passing base score. An additional supporting paragraph based on a related supporting reason would have completed the development of the opinion.  
  
At this point, the writer shows an understanding of the topic and a clear openmon. It was the defense paragraph that went wrong.
## Writing Task 2: Air Pollution.

  
  
People are doing many things that make air pollution, and it has made a pile of serious problems. This essay will write about air pollution's problems, its effect on Earth's creatures and what people should do to solve these problems.  
  
Firstly, industry growing up every day with many manufacturing factories has been and was going to be built. The air waste from these factories like carbon dioxide, fume, ... spill out the environment. Secondly, dust is discharged from mobile sources (motor vehicles, trains, ...) covered almost all streets. When human exposed to those air pollutants, we can get respiratory diseases. Popular is coughing, wheezing, or difficulty in breathing. Carbon dioxide and sulfur made out acid rains, this kind of rain can damage forests and crop heavily, decrease water's quality in lakes, rivers. Also, smoke stacks from fossil power station, waste incinerators and furnace can be the cause of asthma, pneumonia and more dangerous- lung cancer on humans. Too many pollutants in the air are one of the causes of global warming - a bad environmental problem. So that, people need to protect the air in many ways. We can use bicycles or public transport instead of carbon dioxide-emitting transport. Limit the emissions by laws. Replace gasoline-fueled cars with zero-emissions vehicles.  
  
In conclusion, because of the dangerous effects that air pollution creates, humans should handle and rescue the environment as soon as possible.
Please note that writing a mere 234 words could result in an automatic failing score.That is because there is a 250 minimum word requirement for the task. Anability to meet this count indicates a severe lack of vocabulary, grammar skills, and logical thinking. To avoid the word count deductions, write at least 250 words. That will only earn base score considerations but, will not gain any word deductions that may lead to a failing score.  
  
Avoid further grammar deductions due to incorrect punctuation usage. A comma cannot be be followed by any other punctuation mark. A punctuation mack is used one at a time. That is the standard punctuation usage rule and has been for ages. Do not try to change grammar rules that have been set in stone. The writer will recieve a failing G R A score because of the obvious lack of sentence structure and punctuation usage skills.
## The importance of literature and history for pupils

  
  
I feel that school should emphasize national literature and history for various reasons. To begin with, youngsters like learning about their surroundings and by studying their country's idea, culture, and history, they begin to create a sense of identity. Simultaneously, this strategy appeals to parents who have investigated the same literature and historical events as their children and can assist them with schooling. For example, English youngsters read Shakespeare and learn about the Battle of Hastings in the same way that their parents did, demonstrate a generational educational continuity. Finally, educators have a scope of instruction due to the concentration on national literature and history, make curriculum creation easy  
  
On the contrary, pupils may face unnecessary difficulties and misunderstanding when studying world events and foreign novel. I don't think it's beneficial to teach French or American history to an English child who hasn't studied his country history in depth. Certainly, the child will be able to comprehend historical events that occurred in London rather than Paris or Washington. Similarly, any exposure to international literature may necessitate some understanding of a foreign language or translation abilities. Primary and secondary school students are just unprepared for such difficulties.
The essay does not meet the 4 paragraph discussion format for a task 2 essay. When the word count is checked, it becomes clear that the writer did not with the minimum 250 word count either. This presentation will not get a preliminary passing score at this point. The writer has failed to represent the basic requirements because he is not familiar with the required writing format. Failing the preliminary considerations makes it difficult to achieve a passing score when individual sections are relieved. It is important that the writer learns the various task 2 response methods before proceeding with more practice essays.  
  
Next time, divide the presentation as follows:  
  
Paragraph 1 : Restatement + opinion  
Paragraph 2 : Reason 1 + explanation + example  
Paragraph 3 : Reason 2 + explanation + example  
Paragraph 4: Discussion restatement + closing sentence  
  
This is the basic task 2 discussion format. In this version ) only the reasoning paragraphs are presented.
## distance working pros and cons

  
  
With the flourish of technology, working online has increasingly emerged as a new development, several people choose to work at home because of its benefits and convenience. I believe that the advantages of distance working are far weightier than its drawbacks.  
  
On the one hand, working at home may have some negative effects. Firstly, procrastinating is an example. This is because there is not anyone who forces you to work as well as supervises you. As a result, it may lead to missing the deadline or affect your productivity. Moreover, when you are at home, a lot of distractions surround you such as noise, your phone, and so on, and you cannot highly concentrate on your work as a consequence. For example, while you are working, your parents come into your room and ask you something and then you will have to chat with them.  
  
On the other hand, the number of time that will be saved stems from working from home. For instance, instead of waking up at 7 o'clock to prepare and traveling to the workplace, now you can get up later and spend more time for yourself, let alone in traffic jams. It is researched that when the employees have more time for recreational activities, their productivity will be boosted significantly. In addition, working at home also do wonders for the environment. In light of reducing the number of vehicles, the carbon footprint releases into the air will be mitigated.  
  
In conclusion, although distance working can have impacts on the productivity of the employee, the benefit of this trend cannot be downplayed.