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The Migration of birds has attracted attention for numbers of observers because it illustrates an immense journey. The trip also reflects the biological imperative for the animal to develop and unfold into the new nature which prepares the requirement necessary for descent.  
  
The migratory bird pattern is traveling to higher latitudes as long as the warm season. They aim to produce the new generation. No specific places are known to move into the taller land of Southern Hemisphere. Yet, Seabirds carry out it to the Southern Hemisphere to breed.  
  
In the midst of movement, numerous of birds glide for a certain time a day, around six to eight hours, in particular, moving distances of a couple of hundred miles. For instance, many birds habitually cross the Gulf of Mexico taking the time from 24 hours up to 36 hours, even more.  
  
Recently, the number of experts have studied the spectacular phenomena to comprehend with regards to the feat. Most researchers have found that birds own navigational ability to find their destination.
Hi, Afdhel :)  
  
The migrationno capitalization of birds has attracted attention ...  
  
The migratory bird's pattern is traveling to ...  
  
... known to move into the ~~taller~~higher land of Southern Hemisphere.  
  
Yet, seabirds carry out it to the Southern ...  
  
Recently, the number of experts ~~have studied~~are studying the spectacular phenomena to comprehend ~~with regards to the~~this feat.  
  
Most researchers have found that birds have their own navigational ability ...
**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?**  
  
The core solution on traffic and pollution are raising the gasoline prices. According to my point of view, I disagree with this statement because there is still traffic even government has increasing the price of gas, and the pollution is causes from vehicle.  
  
Traffic has become the worst nightmare for people in the city. Raising the gas price is not the best solution on decreasing the number of traffic. We have to consider making more mass transportation rather than raising the price because the benefit itself directly received by citizen. Study from the National Technology University in Singapore shows that japan has decreased the number of traffic over 60% by making mass transportation. As a result public transportation is the essential ones on decreasing traffic in every cities.  
  
Generally people think that pollution is causes by gasoline. This statement is misunderstanding because pollution is come from the machine, which used fuel. In many cities, government has implementing the policy, which normalize used less carbon emission on people's vehicle. In my case, police will give people warning if their private vehicle produces large pollution in the cities. Others ways is advertise the Bike To Work programme also will decrease pollution level. A research from Oxford University shows that wrong type of gasoline, which is use in particular vehicle will produce more carbon emission compare with people who used right gas on their vehicle.  
  
In conclusion, there are many ways how to tackle the issue of traffic and pollution. Rather than raising the price of gas, government can create mass transportation and check people's cars emission so they can control the pollution.
Hi Justin,  
  
In picking the best essay, I think it would be better if you first state the purpose of the essay selection. So we can adjust our judgement to the purpose.  
  
However, here are some of my thoughts on the essays:  
1. I think it misses important data to support the main premise. How many drunk drivers are actually causing incidents? And what is the rate of drunk drivers that causing incident in the past get behind the wheel again?  
  
2. It's a good essay. It'd be better if the essay could provide reference to a study that will support tips suggested in the essay.  
  
3. It sound like a complaining teenager  
4. It's a safe and quite beautiful essay  
5. It gives the impression that the story is not finished yet.  
  
So, I pick the essay #4
There are 8 things which able to leads us to success. First of all is PASSION. Try to do something that you love, not struggle just for money. If you work for love, money comes anyway. Second thing is WORK, so we have to work and fun to make everything easy. Next thing is GOOD. There is no magic, we have to repeat practice to make something perfect. Then FOCUS, we have to focusing our self in one thing. In addition, we have to PUSH our self, physically and mentally. Then SERVE, we have got to serve others something value. Next is IDEA, just think for simple things to build up the creativity. The last is PERSIST, it is most important thing to reach success.  
  
Source: TED
Hi Fauzan  
Let me give you some advice...  
  
(the) Second thing is WORK, so we have to ...  
.., we have to repeat practice (every day) to make something perfect. Then FOCUS, we have to ~~focusing~~(focus) our self in one thing. In addition, we have ~~to~~ PUSH our self, physically and mentally.  
  
Try to make a summary with min 150 words  
Thank you...
There are 8 things which able to leads (TO INFINITIVE SHOULD FOLLOWED BY V1) us to success.THE First of all is PASSION. Try to do something that you love, not struggle just for money. (CONFUSING TRY TO USE SENTENCE S+V+O) If you work for love (WHAT DO YOU MEAN?), money comes anyway  
  
THE Second thing is WORK(WHAT DO YOU MEAN) , so we have to work ...  
  
SPIRIT BRADA YOU SHOULD REVIEW YOUR ESSAY, KEEP TRY TO FIND THE MEANING OF YOUR ESSAY, THE READER CONFUSED READ YOUR ESSAY.
hi,,,  
  
There are 8 **(i suggested you to write in word no number)**~~things~~factors**(avoid using "thing" in academic writing)** which able to leads *us***(refers to??)** to besuccessful .  
  
Try to do ~~something tha~~~~t~~what you love, not struggle ...  
If you ~~work for love~~**love what you work**, money comes anyway. ~~The~~ second ~~thing~~ is WORK, ~~so~~ we have to work and ~~fun~~ to make everything easy.  
  
... repeat practice to make **something****everything to be**perfect.  
... focusing our self in one ~~thing~~**purpose**.  
... got to serve others ~~something~~ value.  
(PLEASE AVOID USING SOMETHING, THING BECAUSE SUCH WORDS IS INFORMAL, NOT USED THAT IN ACADEMIC WRITING)
There are 8 things which ARE able to lead~~s~~ us to success.  
*First of all is PASSION. Try to do something that you love, not struggle just for money.* BETTER TO MERGE INTO A COMPLEX SENTENCE  
=first of all is passion in which people try to do something they love instead of just struggle for earning money.  
  
If you work for love, money WILL come~~s~~ anyway.  
  
Second thing is WORK, so we have to work and fun[fun is not verb. to make it parallel, you may say TO WORK AND ENJOY IT] to make everything easy.  
  
Next thing is GOOD. There is no magic, we have to ~~repeat~~ ROUTINELY practice to make something perfect. Then FOCUS, we have to focus~~ing~~ our self in one thing .  
  
Then SERVE, we have got to serve others some~~thing~~ valueS. Next is IDEA, just think for simple things to build up the creativity. The last is PERSIST, it is most important ...  
  
Mechanically use cohesive devices  
repetition  
avoid write 'thing' since it is too general and contains ambiguity
Helllo brother  
let me give you some advices  
  
First of all is PASSION >> firstly, passion,  
  
If you work ~~for~~with love, money comes anyway  
  
Second thing is WORK, so we have to work and fun ... >> second, working. we have to strive and enjoy whatever we do  
  
Next thing is GOOD. There is no magic, we have to repeat ... >> third, good. make more practices to make it perfect.  
  
keep writing
corrections:  
  
There are ~~8~~(in academic writing for showing number, you should utilize word) things which able to lead~~s~~ (your subject is plural, you no need to use "s" after your verb) us to success.  
  
First of all(,)(please use comma after first of all) is PASSION. Try to do something ......  
  
If you work ~~for~~with(maybe you should use with for this context) love, money comes.....  
  
You should check your essay again, it cause hard to find out the purpose of your writing  
  
Keep writing!
Hi Fauzan,  
  
There are 8 things which are able to lead~~s~~ us to ~~success~~succeed .  
... you love, not only struggle ~~just~~ for money. If you work for love, money will come~~s~~ anyway.  
... and fun to make everythingfeel easy.  
... to repeat practiceS~~to make something~~so that it would be perfect.  
  
Hopefully it helps.
Many species of animals relocate, however winged animal movement specifically has entranced observers for quite a long time. Migration is an incredible case of how nature has reacted to the biological crucial for species to develop and spread out into all conceivable environmental corners that can give the conditions important for species to poliferate and raise kid.  
  
The most widely recognized type of bird relocation includes going to higher scopes of the Nouthern Hemisphere to breed amid the warm season and after that coming back to lower scopes. No land flying creatures are known to move into the higher scopes of the southern; just specie of seabirds relocate toward the southern side of the equator to breed.  
  
A few animal display altitudinal movement. Their reproducing territories are in higher rises, close or at the pinnacles of mountains, while they spend the non-breeding season in neighboring valleys or other close-by low nation. This assortment of movement is run of the mill of numerous grouse species, including the ptarmigan, a type of ice grouse. Numerous stone ptarmigan never leave the high arctic tundra, spending their reproducing season above windswept arctic tops and the winter season in close-by valleys, persevering through a portion of the coldest conditions on earth.  
  
Most winged animals fly for a constrained perriod every day regularly flying separations of a few hundred miles. Nonetheless, it is attempt any longer flights when their courses incorporate intersection extensive bodies of water or other geopgraphic features, for example, deserts and mountains. At the begin of the journey, around 55 percents of its bodyweight is comprised of the fat important to fuel this stunning adventure.  
  
Most studies have found that transient fowls all have some capacity to explore and a natural drive to go in a specific heading. Nighttime transients, those species that go around evening time, appear to take their navigational prompts from the stars. At the point when the stars are obscurred by mists, nighttime transients get to be befuddled and may come back to earth or stray off kilter. Diurnal transients, those relocating amid the day, take their signs from the area of the sun. Diurnal vagrants have likewise been appeared to utilize geographic elements, for example, mountain extents or ocean drifts as different prompts for route. Since the stars and the sun move continually through the span of twenty-four hours, this proposes moving likewise have a feeling of time.
You did it well! It is just a little correction, hope this helps.  
  
... to higher scopes of the ~~Nouthern~~**Northern** Hemisphere to breed ...  
... scopes of the southern; just ~~specie~~**species** of seabirds relocate toward ...  
  
... fly for a constrained ~~perriod~~ period every day regularly ...  
Nonetheless, it ~~is~~**attempts** any longer flights when (...) of water or other ~~geopgraphic~~**geographic** features, ...
Hello Gldvn,  
I would like to give some corrections on your essay.  
  
1. "The most widely recognized types of relocation birds includes ..."  
Explanation: You have to know that migration mean the movement of many animals and also you mention more than one type of relocation on your essay.  
  
2. This sentence "No land flying creatures ..." is better if you make like this " No land flying creatures are known by them to move into the higher scopes of the Southern and just seabirds species relocate toward the southern side of the equator to breed".  
  
3. This sentence "At the begin of the journey, ..." should be "At the beginning of their journey, around 55 percent of its weight is comprised of the fat important to fuel this stunning adventure".  
  
Keep writing Gldvn :)
i enjoy reading your essay, this is some correction for me... keep spirit  
  
... important for species to ~~poliferate~~ proliferate and raise kid.  
  
... higher scopes of the ~~Nouthern~~ NorthernHemisphere to breed amid the warm ...  
  
... fly for a constrained ~~perriod~~ Period every day regularly ...  
  
... extensive bodies of water or other ~~geopgraphic~~ geographic features,  
... around 55 ~~percents~~ percent of its bodyweight is comprised of the fat important to ...  
  
At the point when the stars are ~~obscurred~~ obscured by mists,mists obscure the stars
gold halo I want to give some advice on your writing  
  
... conditions important for species to **poliferate** (proliferate ) and raise kid.  
  
... includes going to higher scopes of the **Nouthern** ( Northern) Hemisphere  
  
... fly for a constrained **perriod** (period ) every day regularly flying ...  
  
... extensive bodies of water or other **geopgraphic** ( geographic) features, for example,..  
  
At the point when the stars are **obscurred** ( obscured ) by mists, nighttime transients ...
It is generally known that the logging companies has various negative impacts to the environment because most industries use crates and paper bags as their shipping. It can be globally seen from the rainforests of Central Africa, Southeast Asia, and South America to the northern forests of Canada and Scandivania in which there are amount of damage occurred in those areas such as habitat loss, pollution, and climate change. Furthermore, the logging effects spread widely into the felling of a swath of trees. Consequently, both terrestrial and aquatic lives are becoming endangered because nutrients, water, and shelter for plants, animals and microorganisms in every ecosystem are lost.  
  
Trees has an essential role to protect the soil beneath; therefore, tree loss can change its integrity. For instance, the rainforest floor, place to myriad plant life, has significant benefits to support a dense canopy of branches and leaves preventing surface runoff. Tree roots are also utilized to stabilize the soil and prevent erosion. In logging, road building is a crucial factor which can damage the soil as it can create furrows the water and disrupt the underground water flow. In aquatic habitats, both vegetation and steam banks can block the entry of soil and other residue in order to keep a steady water flow owing to logging. However, removing trees can cause oxygen reduction in the water, killing fish, and other lives.  
  
On the other hand, trees contribute to protect against air pollution through their leaves filtering pollutants from the air. They create moisture from the soil to the atmosphere causing deforestation in which it can lead to flooding, drought, and forest fires. In deforestation, approximately one-fifth of carbon dioxide emissions around the world causes climate change. Some logging industries burn a number of forests in order to access one area producing more carbon dioxide. In general, as an important natural resource, forests have an amount of biodiversity and irreplaceable wildlife habitats which should be protected for future generations.
The logging industry stocks the incomplete materials products. Unfortunately, the feeling of trees is not without the environmental damage.  
Directly, The harm produces the territory loss, dirt, global warming, and climate change.  
  
The logging impact enlarges beyond just the cutting down of a hole of trees. Food, water, and plants home, animals, and creatures throughout the environment are also lost.  
  
Trees defend the ground under them, therefore the destruction of the tree will be influential toward the quality of the soil. For instance, the rain forest land, home to numerous of vegetation life and also insects, worms, reptiles, and amphibians, and small mammals leaning toward a thick canopy of boughs and foliages to keep it healthy and complete.  
  
The canopy restrains run off by intercepting heavy rain so that water can drip down slowly and can be reserved by the earth. Tree roots also strengthen the soil and help to avoid erosion.
Hello @Afdhel, I got some suggestions for your writing.  
  
Directly, ~~The~~(the) harm produces the ...  
  
.., and small mammals ~~leaning~~(leans) toward a thick canopy of boughs and ~~foliages~~ (foliage /uncountable) to keep it ...  
  
... drip down slowly and ~~can~~ be reserved by the earth.
hii..  
  
Unfortunately, the feeling of trees ~~is~~**are** not without the environmental damage. ~~Directly,~~while The harm (it need noun) produces the territory loss, dirt, global warming, ~~and climate change.~~  
  
The logging impact ~~enlarges~~expands~~beyond just~~ the cutting down of ~~a~~ hole of trees. Food, water, and plants ~~home~~ , animals, (...) the environment are ~~also~~ lost.  
  
Trees defend the ground ~~under them~~ , therefore the destruction of the tree will be ~~influential~~ influence ~~toward~~~~the quality of the soil~~soil's quality . For instance, the rain forest land, ~~home to~~ numerous of vegetations~~life~~ and ~~also~~ insects, worms, reptiles, ...  
  
thank you
**Enviromental Impact of Logging**  
  
Paper product made from plant, material product prepare by logging industry send by shipping to Logging manufacturer send by shipping to customer. Effect from climate change also change ecosystem and many activity form our earth. Consequence of Logging spread out there just the felling ecosystem they are also terrestrial and aquatic.  
  
With forest still protect soil beneath and lives , damages from illegal logging also take erosion . a lot of example consequence from the damages, excessively factor connection with soil damages a considerable part from development facilities. Another damages from logging is aquatic habitats. With removing plant it make much disadvantages. Rainforest also give oxygen to shield from air pollution..forest also retain from damages ecosystem. Several logging corporations also injury huge territory of forest unbiased to facilitate access to one area a practice that releases level additional carbon dioxide.  
  
Rainforests are a vital natural supply with widespread biodiversity and inimitable. Further accountable logging rehearsal would help guarantee that they are endangered for future compeers.
Hi naelendra, I want to give you some suggestions  
  
The Effect from climate change also ...  
  
Paper product is made from plant, ...  
  
many activities form our earth  
  
Actually, this sentence makes the reader become confuse  
  
Another damage~~s~~ from logging is aquatic habitats  
  
The Consequence of Logging spread out  
  
**Please, learn grammar deeply. Based on your essas, appartently you do not know many rules about grammar**  
  
Keep writing, Good luck
Paper product made from plant, material product prepare by logging industry send by shipping to Logging manufacturer send by shipping to customer.  
i am really sorry to say that this sentence does not make a sense  
you should pay attention to the subject-verb agreement  
  
Effect from climate change also change ecosystem and many activity form our earth.  
i would like to re-write this sentence=> Climate change also has affected ecosystem and many ~~activity~~ kind of lives ~~form our~~in our Earth .  
  
Consequence of Logging spread out there just the felling ecosystem they are also terrestrial and aquatic.  
Consequently, logging spreads out and damages terrestrial and aquatic ecosystems.
**Paraphrasing - Environmental Impact of Logging**  
  
A collection of products such as crates and paper bags are supplied form the logging industry. Therefore, it affects the global warming, habitat loss, and pollution which mostly influence the rainforest in Central Africa, Southeast Asia, and South America to the northern woods of Canada and Scandinavia. Logging actions also interplay on both water and land ecosystem like nutrients, water, and shelter for plants, animals, and microorganism.  
  
Rainforest as the home to myriad plants life as well as other beings such as insect, worms, reptiles, amphibians, and small mammals allows canopy of branches and leaves keeping it healthy and intact. The canopy also holds the heavy rainfall so the water can flow in the porous earth.  
  
Erosion is also prevented by the tree roots by stabilizing the soil. As the result, a healthy soil boosts roots development and microbial energy which increase the tree growth and well-being. A main factor of soil logging emerges from road building, with heavy equipment compressing the spongy soil and corrupts the underground water flow. So, the surface of soil wears away, and pull away infertile layer of clay and rocks.  
  
Plants around the river can maintain the water flow by blocking entry of soil and other residue and trees' shadow reduce the growth of algae. However, the logging of aquatic habitats estranges these boons. Eroding soil flows into waterways can cause the organic within its area consume more oxygen then lead to oxygen depletion, killing fish and other wildlife.
Hi, I don't have access to the original article, but your paraphrase sounds pretty good. Here are some suggestions:  
  
... bags are supplied [by] the logging industry. Therefore, it affects ~~the~~ global warming, (...) pollution which [are] mostly influence[d by] the rainforest in Central Africa, ... Logging actions also interplay on {"interplay on" sounds odd to me} both water and land ecosystem[ affecting elements] like nutrients, water, (...), and microorganism[s ].  
  
Rainforest[s serve] as the home to myriad [plant] life as well as other [organisms] such as insect[s ], worms, reptiles, amphibians, and small mammals[, by providing] canopy of branches and leaves keeping it {what exactly is "it" here?} healthy and intact. The canopy also holds {it seems like "cushions" might be better} the heavy rainfall so the water can flow in[to] the porous earth.  
  
... by the tree roots[, which stabilize] the soil. As the result, ~~a~~ healthy soil boosts [root] development and microbial energy which increase[s ] the tree growth ...  
  
A main factor of soil logging {"soil logging" does not make sense} emerges from road (...) and corrupt[ing] the underground water flow. So, the surface of [the] soil wears away, and [exposes an] infertile layer of ...  
  
... logging of aquatic habitats estranges these boons. {"estranges these boons" sounds pretty strange} Eroding soil flows into waterways[, causing] the organic [matter] within its area [to] consume more oxygen [which] then lead[s ] to oxygen depletion, ...