dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
## Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news.

  
***However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media.  
Discuss both views and give your opinion?***  
  
Currently, social media is developing worldwide steadily and the number of humans regularly able to receive information more easily due to convenience and catch up with the trend. Besides that, the articles also are as popular as the media because this is one of the most useful news that lots of people are interested in. In my opinion, I utterly agree with the former ones owing to the benefits of reading online.  
  
Obviously, journals have a lot of advantages for people , especially for older people . First of all, newspapers' content is guaranteed as it is alway heavily censored before being broadcasted as a result, readers protect themselves from misleading information, which is rife on the internet. Furthermore , the professional journalist in prestigious publish company can serve readers with academic writing style, by learning from official sources of printed news, readers broaden their vocabulary and language proficiency.For instance, some parents aspire to their daughter can be able to not only profound writing style but also speak politely with people in modern society so they decided to purchase inexpensive article to their daughter is reading day by day to help them for both develop their intelligent brain and expand vocabulary , this is one of the most efficient strategy for learning of parents .  
  
On the other hand, social media which is considered one of the favourite websites to look for a piece of useful information and knowledge because everyday and every time this web will upload the news faster and more interact . According to hypothesis, the majority of people are becoming busy and do not have enough time to read a newspaper so social media has appeared to deal with these complicated issues to help them advance their life-style . Moreover, Covid-19 is one of the most huge hot reports that lots of people pay attention to , more important in people 's life is affected seriously and then the government decided to upload information related to covid-19 each hour without inhabitants worrying about it . Therefore, social media is really indispensable in modern technology society.  
  
Personally, I always have a trend toward to social media more than newspaper although this information occasionally has some fake news but it is really convenient for suitable juveniles and bring about lots of pros such as about learning aspect, if I did not understand this hard schoolwork, i just search the internet or connect with online tutor and also use some prestigious website to overcomes my exercises easily .  
  
In conclusion, journal and social media are essential nowadays and almost of people can select one of them belong to their viewpoint , newspapers content is guaranteed as it is always heavily censored before being broadcasted while social media is easily to upload the news faster and more interact but for me I am still remain using social media by my smartphone these days.
The prompt restatement in the first paragraph is missing. The exam taker has totally changed both the discussion topic and discussion format/requirement The essay has already failed completely as it does not provide a related paraphrase or response format. The paraphrase is the pass or fail foundation of the essay test. Make even one mistake in this section and the score will fail immediately. The student made several presentation errors in this paragraph. A sure sign of a failing mark.  
  
What are the errors? The main mistakes are:  
- Incorrect topic interpretation  
- Error in discussion response outline based on provided instructions.  
  
The student need only compare his first paragraph content with the original to see the clear mistakes made in his version of the presentation. He began a discussion from a personal point of view where a restatement and outline were required.
## different aspects of staying young adults at home

  
  
People have different views about whether encouraging young people to leave home or keeping them staying at home with family. Although it can be argued that staying at home can bring certain benefits, I believe that living home with their family would be better for them.  
  
On the one hand, it is argued by some that staying with parents can keep children being safe. When they live with their family, they can be assured of food home and especially safety. Because of that, they are in comfort zone, which they should not concern how to make a living. However, they think they do not have to do anything and then easily depend on family. They will be a useless or even a burden of family in society.  
  
On the one hand, it would side with those who believe that young people should leave home when they become older. To begin with, this is a good way to motivate young people live in competitive life. Thanks to challenges and obstacles, they have to fight and overcome with them. According to experts, young people who deal with challenges are more likely to be mature and succeed in life. Furthermore, living far from home makes them ashore that they have to work hard to get a lot of money for family and their parents. However, when living outside, they could be easily fascinated in social evils if they are not careful.  
  
In conclusion, while they are some advantages of staying at home, I completely agree with those who believe that living home is better for young children.
The essay had a very good start. The compare and contrast discussion shows that each public . has a logical reason that made its supporters believe in it. The writer developed the public points of view clearly. There is no question that the public - are being considered deeply and an analysis of the points were done. The discuss both views aspect was well developed and presented. These are the strongest parts of the essay. What is the weak part?  
  
The writer should have explained the basis of his personal opinion after the compare and contrast discussion. The fully developed personal opinion is a required scoring element. The writer cannot offer a personal opinion without basis. Such a presentation creates an incomplete discussion presentation. It fulfills only 75% of the scoring requirement. To achieve 100% scoring basis, all required discussion elements must be fully presented.  
  
The personal opinion for this could have been based on the writer's personal preference. The explanation of the personal option would have resulted in a complete discussion as perprompt requirements. Good work though. The essay can still recieve a somewhat satisfactory score. Though the language used is not perfect, the idea is still easily understood.
***"Some people argue teaching children of different abilities together benefits all of them.  
Others believe that intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment.***  
## Discuss both views and how do you think about it?"

  
  
Nowadays, people hold widely differing views on whether schools should put their students into mixed-ability classes or stream them based on their academic intelligence. Although it is true that practicing 'elite students' policy has a number of certain benefits, I find myself in a complete agreement that schools should continue their traditional strategy.  
  
It is undeniable that teaching faster learners together might improve their study efficiency to some extent, for approaching to more difficult and complex pedagogic materials and their potential abilities would develop as much as possible. Nevertheless, schools and parents should also be aware of the risky consequence of oversimplifying the situation here as well as the advantages of providing students the same syllabuses.  
  
The top priority of education at any level is the development of student's personality and morality. Thus, establishing a separate teaching scheme relied on their good" enough. More over, instead of feeling happy and pleasure going to school, they would feel ashamed of attending lower classes, resulting in low self-esteem and lack of motivation to acquire knowledge.  
  
On the other hand, schooling all pupils in a same course bring a bout a number of values to their progress. To begin with, when being educated together, students with various talents would be able to learn from each other and overcome their weaknesses. For example, those who excel at science subjects but struggling with art subjects could enhance their painting or singing skills with the help of their classmates and vice versa. As a result, they would grow up being well-rounded individuals. Simultaneously, by approaching a healthy and friendly environment, they would be encouraged to express themselves more, therefore boosting their confidence.  
  
In conclusion, I am strongly against the argument of dividing pupils into separate courses due to their intelligence. In order to provide them the best opportunity to develop, remaining the traditional teaching curriculum is a wiser idea.  
  
performance on examinations only is a ridiculous idea since all of us were born with different faculties. Consequently, those who are rejected from studying with the gifted students suffer huge psychological pressure from parents for not being "  
  
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When asked to discuss both points of view , the writer is expected to explain the logic of the belief based on a public line of reasoning. By explaining why a group of people support an opinion in individual analytical paragraphs, the analytical reason behind the writer's opinion becomes evident to the reader. The discussion format should have been based on a comparison format.  
  
The writer has not actually delivered on the prompt requirements as explained above. The presentation actually strays from the discussion topic because of the lack of public opinion explanations. The total essay reflects only the writer's opinion, of each side.  
  
Long as the essay is, when it does not follow the formatting requirements (5 paragraphs) , and does not provide the expected discussion presentation , the essay will suffer severe scoring setbacks.
***Nowadays, some countries encourage people to buy more and more products, which is good for the economy while others believe it is bad for society.***  
  
## Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  
  
In today's modern world, it would be argued by some that increasing products consumption is a bad thing for society. In my opinion, however, it would be more beneficial for the economy to purchase more and more goods.  
  
On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some believe that the rise in products consumption has an adverse impact on society. The primary reason is the throw-away lifestyle, which means people throw away the products when they have something new and they still can be used. This leads to scarcity of resources and is detrimental to the environment. For example, nowadays, many youngsters try to catch the trend on TikTok and Youtube, and then they bought a massive amount of junk food to make a video review of that kind of food and they threw the rest away. Besides, so many people do not have enough food, freshwater, and necessary items. that type of behavior creates a bigger gap between rich and poor in society and a lack of raw materials for the production process.  
  
On the other hand, I would argue that when citizens purchase product in bulk, which could boost the manufacturing economy. It would be beneficial for the government due to the increase in taxes After that the pressure problems such as poor infrastructure, climate change, and environmental pollution would be addressed by the government whereby the economy could develop sustainably. Furthermore, when the cash flow is continuously circulated, inflation would be much lower than saving money in the bank. As a result, the value of money could be increased, and this is very beneficial to the economy.  
  
In conclusion, although some people think that it would be detrimental to society when people buy more and more goods, I personally believe that it would be better for the economy to spend money on shopping.
The writer did not offer an accurate prompt restatement. His presentation is of a general reference while the original subject was based on the premise that "... some **countries** encourage people to buy more and more products". The focus being on countries. The student instead wrote, "increasing products consumption is a bad thing for **society**." The discussion target was altered in the paraphrase. The student used a selective prompt restatement rather than an accurate and complete restatement that includes both public opinions + a personal opinion.  
  
The response format does not follow the " discuss both points of view " in the correct public opinion discussion manner prior to the personal statement. The essay does not meet the response considerations as outlined in the discussion instruction. The writer should learn how to look for the reasoning paragraph number and format within the last half of the original prompt presentation.
***The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.***  
  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  
In the age of technology, the lives of famous people are being over-focused while those of the ordinary are rarely covered in the media. However, I partly agree that more time should be spent on the casual lives.  
  
On the one hand, the media is a great tool to attract people's attention so it would be an opportunity for the poor to be on air. There are a number of people whose lives are badly impoverished. Through media, therefore, people are more conscious of their difficulties and give them a hand so that they may have a better life. For instance, " Vuot len chinh minh" is a game show which records how hard the lives of poor people are and makes a chance for them to win a prize by overcoming challenges in my country.  
  
On the other hand, too much attention are paid to the lives of celebrities in order to satisfying people's curiosity. Each of influencers has a plenty of fans who always have a desire to discover their idol's lives. Additionally, the famous usually show up in a flashy appearance so the way they look in daily lives would be a hot theme. "Real Housewives of Beverly Hills" is an example of a TV show as it reflects the rich's life, which is full of drama but very luxurious and fascinating  
  
In short, the main role of media is to represent various aspects of society. Therefore, I strongly believe that it is necessary to adjust the proportion of TV programs, whether it is about celebrities or the ordinary people.
The essay focuses on television shows such as reality shows and game shows. The discussion focus is incorrect. The media being referred to in the original topic are composed of print and digital media. Newspapers and magazines that report on celebrities.  
  
Report is the keyword in this instance. That is why the discussion content of the essay is wrong. There is no reference to television shows at all. The essay has provided an irrelevant response. That is why the essay will not recieve a passing score.  
  
The writer clearly did not understand the discussion basis and response reference requirements. He understood a part of the prompt. He did not understand that the keywords media and reporting did not relate to television programs.
***In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers.***  
## Do you think advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

  
  
The debate relating to transportation has been in the spotlight for an extended period of time. Recently, there is a belief that automated vehicles like cars, buses and trucks will be dominated in the future. From a personal perspective, such trend, though detrimental to a certain extent, could be considered as a major step forward.  
  
On the one hand, driverless system of transportation has proven itself to be adverse. To begin with, personal driver's security may be deteriorated. In fact, many criminals now are gradually having more sophisticated and cunning plans in stealing the important information of other people. Thus, just by successfully accessing the storage systems, hacker can take the necessary data and control over a whole engine, easily triggering accidents on the road. Moreover, this trend may cause the unemployment of people. To illustrate, thousands of individuals are likely to lose their job as a taxi driver or bus controller since all the vehicles are substituted by automated ones, which may affect negatively their quality of life.  
  
On the other hand, this trend seems to be advantageous from two aspects, as follows. First, human's safety will be guaranteed. There is no denying that, the majority number of accidents nowadays are attributed to drivers' inferior awareness like using stimulants or crossing the traffic light. Therefore, driverless vehicles are promised to decrease the unwanted cases as they can automatically control the speed themselves and utilize computer based system to avoid collisions. Second, this trend may bring about a civilized traffic system. The fact is that, there will no longer have traffic congestion and need police on the road since no more human could break the rules and the distance between two cars might be rigorously calculated in order to minimize collisions.  
  
In conclusion, in spite of several demerits mentioned above, this essay still believe that putting more driverless vehicles on the road is revolutionary to the contemporary society.  
  
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The first sentence of the prompt restatement is an unnecessary presentation. It does not relate to the original topic and actually prompted a discussion topic change. The next discussion sentence saved the day though and brought the topic back on track. But the opinion response does not meet the response guidelines. Consider the following:  
  
O Q: DO YOU THINK ADVANTAGES OF DRIVERLESS VEHICLES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?  
Response: ... such trend, though detrimental to a certain extent, could be considered as a major step forward.  
  
There is a discussion alteration in the response. It does not clearly indicate an answer in the required format. Does this mean the total response is incorrect? No. The second reasoning paragraph was related to the prompt.  
  
The writer offered 2 reasons in that statement that deals with the advantages of driverless cars. Had this discussion been spread out over 2 paragraphs, the essay may have had a better scoring potential. In the current format, the essay is at the low end of the scoring scale.
## international students exchange benefits

  
  
In this era of globalization, global student exchange programs have become increasingly popular. Many teachers consider this trend advantageous for teenagers and from my viewpoint, the drawbacks of this trend pale in comparison with its benefits.  
  
On the one hand, studying abroad can breed many financial troubles and mental illnesses to exchange students. Firstly, education exchange can put a strain on the budget of exchange students and their families. This is because the living costs in foreign countries, especially the developed nations, may be prohibitively expensive when compared to those in students' home countries. Secondly, overseas students may face various obstacles and challenges such as homesickness, cultural shock, language barrier and even racist discrimination. These difficulties hinder students from integrating into new communities, making them suffer from social isolation and depression in the worst scenario.  
  
On the other hand, student exchange can do wonders to teenagers' knowledge and skills as well as job opportunities. For one thing, studying abroad can equip students with an interpersonal skill set. For instance, exchange students living alone can learn how to manage their time and money budget on their own and take care of themselves, which makes them more independent and confident in their adulthood. Moreover, students studying in first world countries have a chance to access the top tier education, acquiring expertise and advanced knowledge. Finally, exchange students can get exposed to alien cultures and gain more deep insights into them which can give students a competitive edge over other job seekers in the future when applying for multinational companies.  
  
In conclusion, notwithstanding the financial burden and mental problems, international students exchange is beneficial for teenage schoolers as it affords them essential skills and knowledge for their future career path. Therefore, orientations should be given to encourage study exchange and minimise its disadvantages.
The essay has partially good and definitely bad points.  
  
Partially Good:  
The writer shows a good understanding of the topic. He offered a good opinion that relates to the discussion requirement. There is a slight problem in the presentation format though. The first sentence is relatively problem free. The second sentence though, presented 2 ideas, which are not related in discussion basis in one sentence. It is a confusing run-on sentence that removes from the cohesive and coherent restatement + personal opinion presentation paragraph.  
  
Definitely Bad:  
The student has decided to use a comparative paragraph that offers justifications for both sides. This type of presentation does not succeed in explaining the writer's single point of view as originally stated because of the now divided opinion presentation. The essay now presents a clouded opinion which does not support the writers opinion in a fully understandable manner. The discussion manner is inappropriate. The presentation is only half correct and will benefit only from half scoring considerations.
## Sweet carbohydrates

  
  
The graph illustrates the process through which sugar is produced from sugar cane.  
Overall, after being cultivated for one year to one and a half years, sugar canes are harvested by hand or machine, removed all the leaves to become the raw material which is the main input of a five-step procedure of extracting and purifying sugar.  
  
To obtain the juice rich in sugar, a crushing machine is used to drain the liquid from the fibre structure of sugar canes, leaving the dry solid waste. The juice is then cleaned by a limestone filter which removes the remaining solid pieces and other impurities. After these two procedures, a purified sugar juice is produced.  
  
The purified sugar liquid is then evaporated by heat to eliminate a partial amount of water. The major purpose of this step is to obtain a syrup containing sugar at a smaller concentration, which is crucial for sugar crystallization in the following steps. To yield the partition of sugar crystals from the semi-liquid part, a centrifuge is used, separates solid and liquid parts due to the centrifugal force at high spinning speed and the density difference. In the last step, sugar crystals are placed in a container to be cooled down and dry and become the finished product of the whole manufacturing process.  
  
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The writer has misidentified the image as a graph. It is actually a procedural image presentation or instructional process outline. A graph pertains to numerical measurements. The task does not require that as it focuses on instructional reporting instead.  
  
There is a missing trending statement as well. The first part of the instructional process cannot be used as the trending statement. The essay should present the creation of sugar as a 3 stage process comprised of 8 steps. This would have been presented in a more accurate manner, had the proper paragraph content presentations been met. The writer basically skipped the first half of the presentation requirement by misusing the information for that section in the trending section.