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Please have your comments on the answer below in terms of Lexical Resources and Grammar Accuracy.  
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Topic:  
***Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.***  
  
## Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  
  
The answer:  
It is not only in our contemporary society, life has been most of the time believed to be challenging. Some difficulties in life such as being broke or unhappy jobs are sometimes accepted by people; nonetheless, there are also people always seeking for solutions and improvements. For me, I side with the latter idea.  
  
There are some justifications explaining for reasons why people opt to do nothing with their bad situations. One of them is due to their pessimism. Those who always think of the possibilities of failures and barriers would never make a move forwards. In this case, they find no reasons to make efforts to improve their circumstances and forfeit their benefits. Besides that, there are also people have a desire for a change but do not have a problem-solving skills. Consequently, having no clues to do people feel less encouraged or feasible to strive for an improvement. As a result, this type of people choose for doing nothing for their bad events.  
  
On contrast, the reverse way of coping with the situations mentioned above is to strive for an improvement, With a different perspective about life, people take distinctive responses to what they encounter during their life. Firstly, some people would see their difficulties as valuable lessons they should learn by solving it and making a move. The rewarding would not only a skill or a lesson, but it would be also a step on a higher living standards (in case of financial shortage). Secondly, when people work toil and moil for a better life in general, these people could be considered to be stronger and more resilient towards any difficulties in their life.  
  
In conclusion, on the one hand there are reasons that some people choose to stay the same with their unpleasant situations; on the other hand I believe people should take it as a chance for learning and move forwards.
It is not only in our contemporary society, life has been most of the time believed to be challenging  
What? You need to either better explain your meaning or just opt not to try to present information not in the original prompt. Your sentence structure is incorrect and does not present coherent or logical information. your sentences suffer in terms of presentation development. you need to perform more sentence development exercises.  
  
Represent the point of view and speaker within the topic sentence of each paragraph.That way the opinion and speaker is clear to the reader. You did well enough in representing the public speaking points. What is missing is the required 3rd paragraph that explains your expanded point of view. Adding that as an afterthought in the conclusion will not work and will cause deductions in your score due to improper discussion formatting.  
  
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## annual gross domestic product growth

  
  
I am using a book named Vocabulary for IELTS by Pauline Cullen and I am having an essay needed to check. The task is in the image. I hope that you can help me check all the mistakes in my writing and give me some feedback for how to improve this essay. Thank you very much for your help!  
  
The chart shows the changes in the average annual Gross Domestic Product (GDP) of three groups of countries in the world during 1960s - 1990s period.  
  
From the chart, we can see that wealthy countries' GDP dwindled from 4.8 percent in the 1960s to 2 percent in the 1990s. Noticeably, there is a significant decrease in the GDP of these well-off nations from 4.8 percent to 2.9 percent in 1960s - 1970s period.  
  
Globalizers' national products, in contrast to those of rich countries, rose dramatically from about 1.3 percent to just under 4.9 percent at the end of this period. In addition, the fastest growth in this phase is in two final decades of the 20th century.  
  
Non-globalizers had their peaks and troughs in domestic goods. From 2.4 percent in the 1960s, the GDP reached a peak of over 3 percent in the 1970s, but then quickly fell to a low of approximately 0.8 percent in the next decade and finally had a slight increase of 1.2 percent in the 1990s.  
  
To recap, there is an upward trend in the GDP growth of globalizers, and there is a downward trend in the GDP growth of wealthy countries and non-globalizers.  
  
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I find your summary overview to be incomplete. Based on the image, there are highlighted information that should have been presented in the first 3 sentences namely:  
  
- measurement basis (types of countries, enumerated )  
- complete image identification ( 3 bar graph presentation)  
- single trending statement  
  
While it is nice to know that you can use the word "percent" repeatedly, it also shows a lack of similar word usage on your part as you cannot use other words in its place. Lack of word variations for it within sentences isn't helping to add to the LR score. A task 1 essay does not need a recap, which is similar to a summary conclusion, as an opinion need not be presented to the audience.  
  
Your formatting could have been better. A 3 paragraph presentation would have better served your c&c score. The essay does not require a 4 paragraph presentation based on the information provided. Which is why each paragraph seems under analyzed and reported in my opinion.  
  
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## the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation

  
  
The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.  
  
The given chart illustrates the proportion of families owning and renting houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.  
  
Overall, the number of people living in their own house increases, except for the year 2011, while that of rented accommodations saw an opposite trend over the period.  
  
In 1918, the figure for households in rented housing stood at 77%, which was three times as much as that of owned housing. In the following years, there was a steady rise in the percentage of people who prefer to own their own house, which was 50% in 1971. That figure was equivalent to that of rented households in 1917, after experiencing a gradual decline of 27%.  
  
Over the next decade, the percentage of owned accommodations continued to reach a peak of almost 70% in 2001, which was followed by a moderate fall of 5% in 2011. Meanwhile, the figure for people who opt for renting a house plummeted to 31% in 2010 before witnessing a slight growth of 5% at the end of the period.  
  
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The given chart illustrates  
Using what charting method? Linear? Bar ? Identify the typeof chart ownage provided. Ldon't just rely on the prompt for image identification.  
  
house increases,  
Time reference error. The measurement has been previously completed. It is not an ongoing action soit should not be using active present tense references.  
  
1917  
No such year is included in the chart. However, there is a reference to 1971. This is an inaccurate year reference which affects the validity of your summary report.  
  
Errors in grammar and task accuracy exist in certain areas of your report. You failed to edit and proofread your data presentation. The errors remained uncorrected so, in the actual test, these would be one of the sources of scoring deductions in your sectional and final score.
***Nowadays online education has become popular as more institutes and companies are offering courses online.***  
## Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this method.

  
  
There is an increase in the number of institutes and businesses using the online meeting method recently. Despite having some controversy, learning online has its pros and cons.  
  
Nowadays, especially in the current pandemic situation, technology plays an important role in education and working. Because of social distancing policies, the online meeting is the most convenient working method to keep our health leading to reducing in the number of covid cases. Another benefit of the online class is that it can save our time and cost for traveling to the study and working spaces, especially with busy people. Furthermore, with many current digital devices, online courses can be recorded meaning that we can save and rewatch them as needed, for instance, students can revise lessons to prepare for their exams or some people can playback them if they miss some parts of the video.  
  
On the other hand, online education has some drawbacks relating to device connection, interaction, and teacher observation. The Online meeting can be disrupted due to many technical glitches such as internet congestion, power cut...which can influence the timeline and the content of the meeting. Moreover, when learning in conventional class, students can get a better chance to interact with their teacher and their peers, as a result, students can grasp the course more efficiently and have an ideal occasion to discuss and work in a team with each other. Also, it is hard for teachers to monitor all their student's progress to make sure they are focusing on the lesson, in fact, several students can sleep and do their own works without teacher detection during the lesson.  
  
All in all, the online meeting allow students to study from anywhere and at any time, it is also cost-effective and suitable with the current pandemic situation. However, it has several disadvantages about technical connection, the lacking of interaction, and teacher's observation.
Despite having some controversy, learning online has its pros and cons.  
So what?What is the point of telling me this if you cannot identify an advantage and disadvantage as preliminary evidence of this statement ? Where is your summarized discussion data basis? The paraphrase is okay but the thesis statement needs work.  
  
Nowadays, especially in the current pandemic situation, technology plays an important role in education and working.  
Redundancy. Start with an actual topic sentence that introduces the subject. The second sentence here is the topic sentence.  
  
Because of social distancing policies, the ... of covid case  
This is an idea statement that you failed to properly develop as a reason. Reasons require supporting examples and explanations to fully make itself understood to the reader. This statement only contains ideas and opinions but severely lacks in justifications. Your C& C score will be affected.  
  
Try to make yourself better understood. Don't just run after ideas. Make the reader believe you are right based on personal experience, knowledge. and publicly known facts. These are the reference points you can use to improve the C&C score of your essay.
Please help me, I just look at some tips about task 1 and I really dont know assess my essay. I think on task 1 we dont need the conclusion, do we?  
  
## Two maps demonstrate the direction to get to a city hospital of two different years (2007 and 2010).

  
  
Overall, after three years, the path to get to the city hospital was upgraded with roundabouts. Besides, the features servicing for travel were improved, including a bus station and distinct car parks. According to both maps, the hospital was surrounded by ring road and people can access this by bus and car. On the west of hospital road, there was a bus station built in 2010 rather than a bus stop in 2007. To the opposite with the bus station, the car park for both staff and public in 2007 was only used for staff in 2010 and the new car park for use of public was built on the east of ring road.  
  
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You are right. Task 1 is a data reporting essay so it does not need a conclusion. However, it needs a trending statement as proof of thorough information analysis. The format requires a 3 paragraph presentation of 150-190 words. Writing any less than 150 words will result in task accuracy deductions based on wordcount requirements. Your presentation does not meet the minimal scoring requirements for a baseline passing score. That is highly unformulate becauseyou have the potential to score well in this task. I would like you write another essay that meets the minimal scoring requirements based on formatting rules. Then I can review the essay based on the major scoring requirements.
## ownership and renting of houses

  
  
The figure illustrates the percentage of the ownership and rent of houses in different countries which were a part of the United Kingdom from 1918 to 2011.  
  
In general, it is evident from the information given that the rent of houses fell steadily over the 80-year period, whilst ownership houses rose quickly. The year 1971 marks the point at which owned apartments overtook that for rent.  
  
In 1918, in England and Wales, renters held accounted for approximately 80 percent of apartments, compared to the owner held nearly accounted for 22 percent. Over the following four decades, household renters dropped by 30 percent. By Contrast, household ownership has grown by almost 30 percent.  
  
Also noteworthy is the fact that in the year 1971, the people of the household in England and Wales held the same accounted percentage on both ownership and renters, holding just over 50percent on each. By 2011, household owners had reached approximately 65 percent, while the figure for renters had fallen to just over half this account.
The figure illustrates  
What kind of figure ? Are you just doing a cut andpaste of the original description rather than a paraphrase? This is a run - on presentation thatshould have been presented in 3 clearly separate sentences. What is your rush in presenting the summary? Clarity is key to your score in this section. Actually, this kind of presentation may have alsobeen better presented as a 3 paragraph presentation. It doesn't seem like you really have enough datato justify a 4 paragraph report. I wish I had an image to refer to so I could better explain this format to you. The rest of the information seems alright. I can't really review other sections of your essay due to the lack of image.  
  
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## The two maps below show an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

  
  
The given maps illustrate the landscape of an island when it was still a wilderness and its changes after development.  
It is readily apparent that there have been significant changes in the layout of the island over the given period. In addition, the island's amenities was constructed on almost its scale except the eastern.  
  
Before being developed, entire island was wilderness and did not have any facilities for living or recreation. However, it was not only surrounded by sea but also existed some forests. These forests were scatted near the western and in middle-east of the island.  
  
After erecting facilities, it is easy to realize that the vast area from the center to the western which was pristine in the past have footpath and vehicle track now. Noticeably, it now have a pier used to be the first destination for tourists to get into the island. Reception surrounded by vehicle track is built at the center and link directly to the restaurant. Both the right and left of reception are houses for resting. Moreover, both forests and beach are still exist. Specially, the beach is now used for swimming. Furthermore, the east is still not changed.  
  
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## Men and women professions

  
  
**Topic:**  
*Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?*  
  
Nowadays, due to some special benefits and limitations, it is argued that gender is an important element to discriminate types of professions. However, I personally assume that gender equality should be encouraged in every profession.  
  
To begin with, it can be said that both males and females have separate characteristics, which enable them to perform well in certain tasks. For women, they are considered exceptionally good at dealing with household chores, baby sitting and so on. The reason for this phenomenon is because kindness and gentleness are naturally gifted for women. Similarly, men also have special traits attached with their personality, they are deemed to be strong, confident and decisive. As a consequence, certain jobs requiring a great deal of physical and mental strength such as earning bread and butter for the home and making decision for the family are usually for men.  
  
On the other hand, based on the fact that the world has changed, I personally believe that both men and women could occupy the same types of work. Nowadays, with the spread of education and equal rights, more and more women are breaking barriers of their homes in order to work outside and undertake several important positions which were once considered to be men's. Genuinely, several female politicians in the world such as Hilary Clinton or Angela Merkel are practical evidence for this tendency. In the same way, husbands and sons are also indulging themselves in household tasks by looking after their children as well as doing household chores, which is a great way to put themselves in their wives and mothers' shoes and somehow understand the difficulties of doing house works.  
  
In conclusion, I understand there are particular characteristics that support both genders with the abilities to do separate tasks. However, by looking at the current norms, it will be wrong to think that they cannot do each other's work.
Your understanding of the prompt topic and discussion instruction is incorrect. This created an automatic failing score for this essay. Compare the following to see exactly how you did that:  
  
O.Q.: Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?  
Y.R. : I personally assume that gender equality should be encouraged in every profession.  
C. R.: I believe that men and women should be not limited in terms of work participation based on their sex. My opinion is based on (reason 1 ) and ( reason 2 ).  
  
This is a singular opinion discussion that requires 2 reasons and explanations in 2 paragraphs. The comparative style of discussion is not used based on the question response reference. These 2 mistakes in presentation, plus the other possible deductions based on the scoring criteria, I do notbelieve this essay will melita passing score. The main problems you have relate to English comprehension skills and proper topic response development.
Please rate my essay and give advice, Thank you very much  
  
**Topic**:  
***The number of people choosing to live by themselves in increasing rapidly in recent years.***  
## Why? Positive or negative development for society?

  
  
Living on their own has become increasingly common among the number of people in recent years. People hold different views about how a large proportion of people who decided to live alone affects individuals and societies. To my way of thinking, there are some main reasons for this situation and some negative effects will be discussed later.  
  
There are numerous factors accounting for the reasons why more and more individuals living by themselves. One of the main causes is that the young can be pronounced receive some benefits from that, especially the independence. From living alone without parents' help, young adults can learn more about personal soft skills and the way managing their own money. They can also broaden the freedom and private space and use their schedule which suitable for their work and lifestyle without bothering other family members. Another plausible explanation is reducing responsibilities and financial burden. At some certain ages, people tend to get married and have their kids, that is the reason why many families get difficulties in finance and they must hold bigger duties. Instead of that, others choose to live by themselves to concentrate on developing careers and follow their passion.  
  
In fact, this phenomenon might cause deleterious impacts on individuals and social development. One of the key disadvantages is age population problems. To explain, the elders living alone without a caring person, usually feel isolation, loneliness, and emptiness. It becomes more difficult and dangerous when they sick and too old to take care of themselves. The growing aging population has also resulted in the government taking on additional responsibilities for managing and supporting single families. Moreover, that can lead to unemployment and lacking accommodations.  
  
In conclusion, the youth tend to decide to live on their own because of private space and family responsibilities decreased, and it can have a clear influence on each personal and social development.
To my way of thinking, there are some main reasons for this situation and some negative effects will be discussed later.  
Don't repeat the instructions. If you can restate the questions accurately, then you should be able to create direct responses to each question. These will create your thesis statement and provide an assement tool for your English comprehension skills. Direct questions always require direct responses in the restatement paragraph.  
  
You have not provided explanations for your reasons. The most you have done is provide successive reasons which, sadly, remain without proper reasoning development. This created under developed , incoherent, and cohesiveless paragraphs. I betyou already know where your major failingscores will come from right? You won't get good scores based on reasoning alone. Clarity of thought, related examples, and properly expanded explanations are what matter the most in terms of scoring requirements.  
  
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you should state your point of views rather than rephrasing the instruction in the opening by saying **I believe that ....**  
I think you need to pay more attention to your grammars, or else you may lose marks on grammatical points and accuracy:  
... learn more about ~~personal soft skills~~ **soft personal skills** and ~~the way~~ managing their own money  
  
You can use several collocations to make your essay sound more natural:  
~~Living on their own~~  ***Leading an independent lifestyle*** has become increasingly common ....  
... to live ~~on their own~~ **independently** because of ....  
  
You should also tighten your sentences by cutting extra words or shorten phrases:  
~~that is the reason~~ **which is**why many families ~~get~~ **have** difficulties ...  
  
~~In fact,~~ this phenomenon ...