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## A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions.

  
***Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.  
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?  
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience***  
  
It is pity to see a person' s worth nowadays to be judged according to social status and material possessions. The values like honor and kindness seems to become obsolete. I disagree the above opinion based on the following two points.  
  
A person's worth should be determined by how much effort someone has contributed to society within his or her capabilities. For instance, Ming Gor, who is a restaurant owner in Sham Shui Po, has been delivering free box meals to grassroots and poor elderly for almost 10 years. Despite he is not rich or privileged, he does gain lots of respects from others regardless of their political backgrounds because he is helping needy people in the society with his limited capability. People expect someone with greater powers should benefit the society with larger extent. Therefore, if someone is doing favor of the society in exceeding his powers or capability, they will be praised for their sacrifice and effort.  
  
Moreover, a person's worth depends on if he or she has caused any harms to surroundings regardless of their social status and possessions. The harms are not only referring to tangible or physical damages instead it could be something psychological and spiritual in nature. Some politicians received high wages and possessed more privileges than others, yet they did not gain the respect and trusty from others instead discontent and hatred filling the space. Their behavior may even jeopardize the core values and harmony of the city and eventually turn it into more divided and desperate. As a result, people do not consider those people are worthy for the society and hope them disappear themselves in the long way.  
  
In conclusion, the old-fashioned values seem to contribute more to the society and do no harms to others meanwhile higher social status and material possessions cannot guarantee that it will make noisier impacts than the other ways do. Therefore, these values are not obsolete instead they are fundamental for a human being to behave.
Do not offer a personal opinion in the first paragraph (it is a pity...) because the personal opinion should not cloud the original prompt interpretation. That opinion could instead, be merged with the reasoning paragraph or concluding summary. When you offer the disagreement, include the reasons why in tums of discussion outline ( I disagree because the values of kindness, honor, and trust one still visibly valued these days).  
  
The discussion paragraphs have valid points and proper supporting examples. The student may want to build his vocabulary and grammar in terms of noun presentations Harm, for example can be a countable or uncountable noun. Hence the reference word remains the same for both singular and plural forms. It does not form plurals being a plural nominative and singular genitive. These days" harms" mostly refers to the act of harming someone.  
  
The concluding paragraph will benefit from pauses in the presentation. The cuts in thought presentation are too far apart. The presentation needs to see more comma and period usage.
## nowadays people often work and study remotely

  
  
Nowadays, we are living in an ever-changing world with technological advancement. The prevalence of wifi and the consistently decreasing price of laptops or smartphones have made it easier for people of all income levels to work remotely. In my opinion, this is a positive development for students and workers alike.  
  
On the one hand, there are some reservations when it comes to the rising popularity of telecommuting and del e-learning. While some proponents supporting this view suggest that the constant distractions associated with social media are only more pervasive when a student does not have his or her tutor to keep them on task. In addition, the majority of employers and managers are concerned about privacy risks. Companies depend on their intellectual property and information is kept confidential. If the information is compromised because of the worker's insistence on remote work, then both the employer and employee could be in jeopardy.  
  
On the other hand, the rise in distance learning courses and remote work has its merits. First of all, the most prominent of classes or workplaces which are conducted electronically is their flexibility. Distance learning allows students to acquire knowledge at a much lower cost and reduces the barrier to entry for many people. Moreover, their laptop and virtual learning freedom let them prioritize their assignments that need the most effort. Secondly, the challenges of raising children, staying on top of bills, and spending time with family and friends are alleviated when workers are not required to commute long distances. As a result, employees can seamlessly go from working on a project online to picking up their children from school without issues.  
  
In conclusion, although there has been some minor concern about the security risks and freedom, I believe tech-based work life is a positive development that has become more common.
The restatement + opinion statement is well developed. The response provided is concise which made this an effective opening /introduction paragraph. However, the 2 reasoning paragraphs do not properly support the opinion. This is the part that may cause a failing mark ffor the presentation. The reasoning discussion in support of the opinion should have done the following over 2 paragraphs:  
  
Sentence 1 - Present some information about working from home / learn from home that could not be done without computer technology.  
Sentence 2 - Explain how computer tech made it possible  
Sentence 3 - Give an example of the positive effect  
Sentence 4 - support the sample with an additional explanation  
Sentence 5 - Transition to topic 2  
  
Do not merge the discussion points for both topics. That makes the information confusing. Use one highlight for each in a stand alone paragraph.
## WRITING TASK 1 - The diagram

  
  
The diagram illustrates the various stages involve in making ketchup of tomato.Overall,the whole process is a cycle which can be divided into 11 stages.It begins with harvest tomatoes and finishes in the delivery of the final product.  
  
Firstly of all,having harvested,the famers sorted good and bad tomatoes for purpose difference,following this the tomatoes were sent to factory in which remove stalk,seed and skin for crushing in container.Before decoction process,the liquid was then added with salt,sugar and vinegar.Having left about 2 hours,the process involved in pouring into bottles and labeling.After this step,to ensure goods,the ketchup was managed in quality control and transported to supermarket.Tomato ketchup was used with fires and hamburgers  
  
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The essay is guaranteed to receive a failing score since it is only composed of 111 words/ 150 words. The word count problem arose from the improper paragraph formatting. There should be 3 paragraphs presented here at a minimum, 4 paragraphs the most. There is an error in the procedure description. The images comprise 3 stages of an 11 step process, not 11 stages. The procedure is for making tomato ketchup, not ketchup of tomato. The second paragraph was written too quickly. There is no analysis of the steps presented. The drawings indicate a visual meaning that the writer must put into words. The lack of analysis further contributed to the lack of word count.
## aging population brings many problems

  
  
in this day and age, many developed nations have experienced a substantial increase in life expectancy which puts a heavy burden on the healthcare system as well as the government. Because of that, I firmly believe this issue is not regarded as an easy problem to handle.  
  
It is indisputable that the middle-aged groups are more likely to be related to chronic diseases resulting in the growing usage of pharmaceutical and costly special treatments. Consequently, the government needs to allocate a large budget to the healthcare system attempting to meet the aging population's demands. However, this investment could cause shortfalls in other areas such as the economy and education. Hence, This change in the distribution of money can impact society negatively.  
  
There is a multitude of solutions that the government should take into account. About the former, predicting the changing demographic situations in their countries and plan accordingly will be helpful speculation for all possible eventualities. Additionally, money management courses should be put forward to raise people's awareness of how important money is and how to save it properly. In this way, those who no longer earn any money could get access to basic amenities including accommodation, food, and medical care without depending on their family or the government.  
  
All in all, the aging population has been receiving a great deal of public attention as it affects economic growth and many aspects. The government, therefore, implement promptly the above-mentioned solutions to tackle the rising number of senior citizens
Be aware of the required word count for the Task 2 essay. There must be at least 250 written words presented. Deductions tothe TA score will be applied for under- witten essays. There are only 248 words here. The passage is also started with a lower rather than uppercase letter as required by English grammar rules.  
  
The first half of the prompt is not dealt within this essay. The paragraph that should respond to: "Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today?" was not addressed. There is a whole paragraph response section missing in this presentation. That missing response shall reduce the overall score due to an under-explained at low response essay presentation. Only a partial score will be provided for the response to the second question. Due to the present errors, this essay will not be given a passing consideration.
## the future of advertising

  
  
Advertising, along with the development of technology, has recently become more and more ubiquitous causing some public controversy. While some people believe that the prevalence makes it no longer effective, I side with those who support the idea that advertisements still play an important role in the way we purchase products.  
  
On the one hand, some people hold the view that advertising is so pervasive that they tend to ignore. People are often bombarded with multitude of pop-up ads and banners whenever using social media or handed with countless promotion flyers on the streets. Consequently, this practice has resulted in negative attitude towards advertisements of a part of society. Furthermore, those who irritated would then be prone to skip the displayed ads or use Adblock tools to avoid all commercials. Personally, I sometimes annoyed about the ad breaks while enjoying my favorite television shows. Therefore, commercials should be reasonably placed in order to improve experience of some viewers.  
  
On the other hand, it is widely believed that advertising remains its indispensable position in retail activities. First, throughout creative and viral advertising campaigns, business companies could raise the brand awareness and easily launch new products to potential customers. Take this following sausage company as a case in point. During prime time viewing, they showed a TV commercial of their goods. Also, the promoted sausages appeared with a high density, special visual effects and catchy music that stuck out in viewers' mind and gradually made them incline to purchase. In addition, many companies advertise things in terms of clients' emotion. There are mass of tailor-made ads consist of stories, slogans exploiting people' desires, fears and anxieties. Undoubtedly, those companies would gain benefits from the convinced customers. As a result, advertising in many forms influence the way we buy things.  
  
Inclusion, opinion is divisive but from my perspective, although there are some try to avoid frequently appeared commercials, advertising should be sustained and improved in the future.
This is a single opinion essay based on the question ;" Which side do you agree with?" Based on your I response, you appear to understand the point of the discussion and have an opinion about it. It is just too bad that you failed to deliver a clear topic paraphase. The focus on word usage resulted in words used that did not deliver the original point.  
  
The comparison essay format is not appropriate for a single . paragraph. The writing instruction doesn't inclicate a need to "discuss both points of new" so that should not be done. Instead, 2 discussion reasons, developed over 2 paragraphs should have been provided. As a result, this presentation has only I scurable paragraph in relation to the writer's opinion. It may not be enough to result in a passing score as the supporting reasons are not completely presented.
## **Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.**

  
*Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.  
  
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.*  
  
Relationship between future career path and subjects is inextricable. In the light of it, what disciplines students should learn is always a topic of general interest. The masses remain divided over whether learning toward subjects they like or just focus on necessary ones which are useful for their future is a better choice. From my perspective, I strongly believe that the latter measure is more reasonable.  
  
The advocacy for pursuing their hobbies is largely justifiable. The key rationale is that without any real passion for your studying, undergraduates will eventually not only run out of your motivation but also feel generally miserable when struggling to attend lectures and completing assignments. In a long run, it seems wise if students have a start with something they love. In addition, people should not force themselves to capture disciplines the majority of humans impose on them because it may inadvertently defer students from living their own lives associated with their own confidence. My friend exemplifies perfectly the situation. He tells how he loved drama since an early age, but choose law because he thought it would make him seem clever and employable. However, he ended up dropping out after one year because he felt he did not belong to this place and it took him a long time to begin over again with his true dream.  
  
Notwithstanding the sensible reasons mentioned, I am of the option that subjects related to their opportunities later on should be given precedence over others. First of all, if students' degrees do not directly lead to a career path, it could be difficult for them to decide which path to take and they might end up feeling lost or confused about what to do next once the excitement of graduation fades away. Additionally, the fact is that tuition fee for enrolling in university is a huge investment of time and money so graduates still have deep debts on their shoulders. This is compounded by price tags of paying for their daily lives such as water, electricity bill and so on. Due to all the factors, it is more realistic when students put a course they really love off in favor of opting for a more typically employable subject as it is more understandable route with so much competition out there.  
  
In conclusion, while there is a fairly justifiable method for chasing their own hobbies, I genuinely believe that students' expenses should be diverted to studying more important disciplines like science and technology, which is instrumental in the preparation for expanding their future career.
The essay is over 400 words long. It will not be possible to properly edit and complete an essay of this length within 40 minutes. Practice essays must be written with the help of a countdown timer toensure writing accuracy within a limited time frame. That includes proper - of prompt adherence, editing, and proofreading of the presentation before the time is up. A properly developed explanation of 300 words will be best for scoring requirements.  
  
The essay must consider the public opinion basis of the discussion in 2 seperate paragraphs. The personal opinion is the third consideration. Remember the reference to " some people" and "others" there are reference markers for the discussion format/ requirements. Those are what created the 5 paragraph essay structure. One paragraph ffor each, clearly referenced with alternative point of view pronouns (They, their, I, me) Fully develop each opinion in an easy and quick to read paragraph.
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***In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food.  
It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.***  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

  
  
Health issues are closely associated with people's consumption of fast food so that a higher tax on this kind of food is suggested as a good measure. Personally, I completely disagree with this view.  
  
In my opinion, a higher tax might play no role in improving the situation if people don't have awareness of protecting their health as well as having knowledge of the consequences of eating too much fast food. Take me as an example, m weight is rising every year as I have a habit of eating after 10 p.m and whenever I feel hungry. Therefore, it is highly important in your endeavor to improve your health by keeping yourself away from unhealthy food.  
  
Another reason for government should not impose a higher tax on junk food is because it would be a financial problem for people who earn less. Sometimes, hamburgers or processed food are familiar to poor workers due to their cheap prices. Junk food helps them not only save time but also have more hours at work as they don't have much time to prepare a nourishing meal. Thus, instead of raising the tax, the government can reduce the amount of food produced in the sale market every day. Besides, introducing healthy food through social media or by doing propaganda are also good ways to limit fast food consumption.  
  
In conclusion, I disagree with the view that government should impose a higher tax on fast food because I believe that there is more than one way to make the situation better.
The writer clearly understood the given discussion and offered a clear opinion, ably supported by explanation paragraphs. Both paragraphs represent good discussion points in support of the writer's opinion. There is just a slightpresentation problem in the personal experience reference. The writer neglected to clearly mention his fast food diet, which should not be confused with junk food as there are some healthy fast-food offerings such as pre-made salads and vegetable with meat sandwiches, such as those sold in vending machines or fast food restaurants, and food trucks or hawkers. These are the fastfood references in this essay. To further strengthen the conclusion, a 2-3 sentence setup is needed. Repeat the 2 most important supporting reasons quickly to complete the concluding summary.  
  
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## THE TENDENCY TO adopt a throw-away lifestyle

  
  
These days, it is observed that we are now adopting a cast-away lifestyle. This could be attributed to a number of factors and it could affect humans quality of life and the economy of a country.  
  
There are two main contributors to the shift away from a frugal lifestyle to come into a throw-away lifestyle among people. In every country all over the world, for many, purchasing the latest-version equipment has become a must-have decision to make. Since that, owning the most modern things is something not many individuals can achieve so that it could increase your self-confidence and earn other's respect. On the other hand, people keep being attracted to a wide variety of convenient goods and appealing ads, therefore, they get caught up in buying new and disposing of the old ones. This 'new one in, old one out' tendency is caused by the flood of mass-produced items at a low price in the markets, which explains the consumerism in every human being.  
  
Living in a wasteful society may not pose any immediate restrictions but in the long run, it could have a stultifying impact on the economy of a nation or human health. Research has shown that inflation can only improve if the prices of imported goods fall due to decreasing demand. Reducing inflation is at the core of a country's economic development so increasing demand for advanced equipment and getting rid of old ones can hinder the economic development of a society. Furthermore, humans are still suffering from countless incurable health problems due to environmental pollution and we can only hope that the amount of non-biodegradable waste will be reduced. Throwing away items that are no longer needed will prolong the environmental problems and increase the number of deaths from those health issues simply because the increased amount of waste causes soil and air pollution.  
  
In conclusion, the tendency among people to adopt a throw-away lifestyle can be ascribed to the high level of being wealthy or trendy. This development is deeply troubling as it would fail to enhance people's well-being and stultifying economic growth in the long run.
There is a lack of discussion outline in response to the questions from the original prompt. The topic presentations are expected to create the basis of the reasoning paragraph discussions. The restatement fails to include a reference to the discussion flow per question, which will be the basis of the TA score, which helps to decide if the essay will pass or fail.  
  
The reasoning paragraphs are clear and connected enough. Although, the grammar structure could be better. Try to avoid referencing "research" in the explanations since these need to be based on personal knowledge / experience, or public knowledge. Research does not fall under that criteria. Since you can make up information, just frame the explanation as based on personal or public aspects.
## tourists to England who visited Brighton attractions

  
  
A glance at the line graph reaveals the percentage of frequent visiting in four tourist destination in Brighton from 1980 to 2010  
  
Overall, there was an increase in the number of people who visit Pier and Pavilion. Art Gallery and Festival, however, saw an decline in the proportion of visitors.  
  
It can be seen from the graph that in 1980, the proportion of peole who visited Pier was the lowest, at about 10%. Despit some fluctuation, this figure rose from about 12% in 1990 and to 20% in 2010. The number of people choosing Pavilion as their tourist destination stood at approximately 23% , which was the second highest in the figure in 1980. This was followed by a period of exponential growth, with the tourists in this place reached the highest number at about 49%.  
  
The most popular places of interest in Brighton was Festival in 1980 at 30%. And after some variation, this number ended up standing at 28% - a little lower than the number of visitors at the beginning of the graph. The figure of Art Gallery's tourist in 1980 was about 21%. Then, the later 5 years brought a considerable increase in this figure, at almost 38%. However, the number tended to slip gradually and ended at approximately 9% in 2010.  
  
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