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These days, connecting between a country and ~~another~~others had become important (...) which had ~~positif~~positive and ~~negatif~~negative impact in order ~~for~~to society.  
  
... this regulation ~~have~~has enormous number (...), but the authority ~~have~~has to fit the condition.  
  
This rule has become a common in the most country ...  
... joined into the nation alliance ~~that~~ can allow to trade their ...  
That can rise the provit and ~~increased~~increase the economical condition.  
... tax of goods that comes from ~~outside~~foreign country.  
  
In contrast, it can give the opposite of result if the local entrepreneur ~~donot~~does not have ~~challenging sense~~sense of competition . The free ~~movement~~trade of goods would ...  
  
... likely to choose other brands than original brand.  
... foreign brand that have more low-cost than local brand. It can eliminate the native opportunity to develop and ~~to~~ endorse their label.  
  
To sum up, it can provide merit for local brand if the government ...(you need to summirize the essay, not just a recomendation)  
@ Alamsyah Ismail that's all about my advices,,keep writing
The fashion brand which is renowned by its floral pattern, Cath Kidston, is ready to expand after its takeover by Hong Kong investment firm hiring William Flanz -former boss of Gucci- as the chairman.  
  
Cath Kidston has already had 133 shops in Asia and will open more in Asian countries later this year. Besides, last week the firm collaborated with Disney including the collections of Winnie the Pooh and these new products led to the biggest online sales ever. The company are totally entering a new stage of selling with involving Asia to increase its profit and this year has been the most successful beginning to exist and gain more new customers.  
  
Eventually, as well as going internationally, the company will attempt to continue the innovation by exhibiting the collaboration products with Disney which is launched in stores this month.
**Hi.  
Please, check my notes. Hopefully, it can help you to improve your knowledge.  
GOOD LICK**  
  
The fashion brand ~~which is~~(You should omit that here) renowned by its floral pattern, (...) to expand after ~~its~~ IT IS(NEVER EVER EVER USE CONTRACTION IN THE FORMAL WRITING) takeover by Hong Kong'S investment firm hiring ...  
  
Besides THAT, last week the firm collaborated (...) Winnie the Pooh, and these new products ...  
The company ~~are~~ IS (VERB AGREEMENT) totally entering a new stage (...) to increase its profit.(Don't forget to place comma because it has a different subject) and this year has been ...  
  
... the collaboration products with Disney ~~which is~~ launched in stores this month.  
**Note: Sometimes , you should harness omitting technic to make it more various.**
**TED SUMMARY 7 - HOW TO CONTROL SOMEONE ELSE'S ARM WITH YOUR BRAIN**  
  
Greg Gage is someone who has a big intention in neuro-revolution and electrophysiology, came and demonstrated in front of TED's viewers how a brain could take a control over somebody's arm. It seems impossible to send a message from our brain to someone else's body. However Gage proved that it could be happen. In his speech, he emphasized that brain is an amazing and most complex organ which able to give a command almost to a whole part of body. Unfortunately, people will not get any further information about brains in schools because it necessitates expensive and complex devices, takes you to the university or large institute to know the specification of brain and be a neurologist, beside to access your brain you need to dedicate your life around 6 and half years or more than that to discover the neuroscience. In this occasion, he demonstrated a system called DIY invented by his friend and him to the public. An instrument which is capable to show that human's brain has a control to move other's arm, helped by 2 volunteers, at the first time, he showed that a single movement has been done by one volunteer caused by the message has been sent by brain to the arm. At the second time, he connected some cables to the other arm's volunteer to prove that a single command from the first volunteer brain can moves and rules the second volunteer's arm. And when the first person squeezed her arm, a weird and strange thing happened, the second person's arm was moving simultaneously as the first person's arm moved. This is for him is a revolution of neurology and an improvement of electrophysiology. Imagine what is the most possibility thing human can do with this theory that one brain can control someone else's arm.
Hello rosadesiana  
I have some advice to you  
  
any further information(s) about brain~~s~~  
**...any refer to information, that's why information must be plural word**  
  
your life around 6 and half years or more than ~~that~~ to discover  
**....i think you donot need conj in your sentence**  
  
the first volunteer brain can move~~s~~ and rules the second  
**.....after modal, should use verb bare infinitive (move)**
Cavalier stars basketball player, James LeBron has supported Hillary Clinton for next president of the United States. He said that, He endorsed Hillary because this candidate will continue Barack Obama Legacy. Moreover, He believe that, Hillary has committed to provide a good policy in education and reduce the violence. According to LeBron, The United States need a president who bring in unity and peace among other people. No matter where she or he were from even the color of skin. American must stand equally. LeBron has argued this issue after attacking some policeman and his charity organization announced a program in August 2015 to help students attend college.
Hi Pattahindi,  
  
Here's my thoughts about your article summary. I hope this would be helpful.  
  
- ...James LeBron has supported Hillary Clinton for becomingthe next president of the United States of America .  
- He said that he(comma is unnecessary) endorsed Hillary because this candidate ~~will~~is going to continue Barack Obama's Legacy.  
- Moreover, he believes that Hillary has committed to (...) and to reduce the violence. (parallel structure)  
- According to LeBron, the United States of America needs a president who can bring ~~in~~ unity and peace ~~among~~towards other people.  
- No matter where she or he ~~were~~comes from, even the color of his or her skin.  
- American people must stand equally.  
- LeBron has argued about this issue after (...) to help students attending college. (I have corrected the grammar of this sentence, but it seems like it has contradictory meaning.)  
  
Cheers :)
Cavalier ~~stars~~ basketball player STAR, James LeBron [NEED COMMA] has supported Hillary Clinton ~~for~~ TO BECOME THE next president of ...  
He said that,[NO COMMA NEEDED HERE] He endorsed Hillary because ...  
Moreover, He believe that,[NO COMMA NEEDED] Hillary has committed to (...) and TO reduce the violence.  
... United States needS a president who bringS in unity and peace ...  
No matter where she or he ~~were~~ COMES from even the color of skin.  
  
at all, punctuation issue is a matter. some minor errors did not ruin your sentence but still need to be concerned. try to make a longer summary so there will be many things to suggest or correct there. good luck
**The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries.  
  
Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.**  
  
Free trade across countries has long been a polemic issue. Many people believe that it is necessary for economic development. Just the same, others argue that free trade threatens local industries, both small, medium, and large industries. In this essay, I will discuss both views and state my own position.  
  
People who support the free trade argue each country has the advantage that distinguishes the country from each other. For example, Indonesia as a maritime country has the advantage of marine products. Tuna fish, lobster, and seaweed exported to other countries that do not have a lot of marine products. The price of Indonesia's marine products become cheaper than local prices in export destination countries. This trade provides benefits for both countries.  
  
Meantime, opponents of free trade claim that the unrestricted movement of goods and services causes damage to local industries. Free trade cause prices of imported goods become cheaper. People prefer cheap imported goods with the same quality as domestic goods. This phenomenon led to reduced demand for domestic goods and adversely affected the local industries. This condition causes the slowdown of economic growth, increased percentage of unemployment, and declining state revenues from taxes.  
  
In conclusion, free trade has its advantages and disadvantages for the economy of the country. It may be a factor supporting economic growth. On the other hand, if it is not controlled by the regulator, then it becomes a disaster that led to the economic slowdown. Even though almost all countries have free trade, I believe that the government of each country has set up a policy to save the economy of their country.
Hi Erwin..  
these below are my suggestions for your essay. Hopefully, my notes can help you  
  
others argue that free trade threatens local industries~~, both small, medium, and large industries~~(It's not essential)  
  
In this essay, I will discuss both views and state my own position.  
*The thesis statement is one or two sentences which describe what you are gonna explain in the body paragraph. Each opinion can be presented by one or two words so that readers can get description briefly.*  
  
each country has the advantage that distinguishes  
EACH COUNTRY HAS A PRODUCT CHARACTERISTIC DISTINGUISHING.....  
*(you should harness words appropriately to describe what you mind.)*  
  
Free trade cause prices of imported goods become cheaper.  
THE FREE TRADE MAKES PRICES OF IMPORTED GOODS CHEAPER.  
*(You should review difference between use of cause and make)*  
  
This condition causes  
(Avoid repetition. You harness word "cause" more times.)  
  
then it becomes a disaster that led to the economic slowdown  
(verb Agreement... A DISASTER THAT LEDS TO.. You explain a fact if you should the present tense)
**A legal trade of ivory would wipe out elephants**  
  
Recently, a research published that the amount of ivory elephants in Africa were significantly decrease of demand to overseas. It caused by legalizing trade. The study also announced that ivory demand is twice greater than amount of ivory. Now, number of elephants are decline significantly. In fact, demand for ivory in Asia that these some 27,000 elephants are killed a year. It was against ivory trade that some countries around the world are set to discuss about international ivory trade which banned 1989. Some argued that the illegal trade would decline as result of legal sale ivory. However, others argued that a legalized trade will bring some elephant populations are increase enough. Zimbabwe and Namibia where both proposed bring back the trade on the ivory. Next, these scenario would happen that looked by new study had result which these countries have quotas high enough to meet demand. It meant, over-exploitation drive elephants in danger.
Hi PHA  
  
Let me give you some advice  
  
... elephants in Africa were significantly ~~decrease~~(decreased) of demand to overseas. It caused by ~~legalizing~~(legalising) trade.  
... demand is twice greater than (an) amount of ivory. Now, (a) number of elephants ...  
It was against (an) ivory trade that some ...  
... bring some elephant populations are ~~increase~~(increased) enough.  
Next, ~~these~~(this) scenario would (...) had (a) result which these countries ...  
  
just some misspelt words here  
and a little of a grammatical mistake...  
Thank you...
This year's advertising week event has been marred by uncertainty. In the week leading up to it, Dentsu, a big agency, taken overbilling by its digital-ad division in Japan; and Facebook said it had expanded the average time people spent watching video ads.  
  
Digital ads were understood to help. Cookies and other tags would direct the right advertisements to the right people, based on their activity online. Digital tools would track which ads affect consumers to buy products.  
  
The first is that Facebook and Google have simply become too dominant. In 2015, the pair considered for more than 75% of online-ad growth in America, according to a venture-capital firm, Mary Meeker of Kleiner Perkins Caufield & Byers. Google and Facebook have started to allow third parties to verify some data, but many metrics remain proprietary.  
  
The Association of National Advertisers has devised a model contract to protect its members' curiosities. The recent outcry may prompt Facebook and Google to be more open. Facebook articulates it will let third parties measure how long a viewer sees a display ad, though the company has yet to set a date.
Hello  
You have a good summary  
I have some corrections  
  
~~This year's~~**Recently**, advertising week event ...  
... Google have simply become ~~too~~**very** dominant. In 2015, ~~the pair~~**both** considered for more ...  
... to verify some data, but ~~many metrics~~**it is** remain proprietary by both of them.  
~~Facebook articulates~~ it will let third parties measure how ...  
  
You can explain more for the digital ads.
**TED SUMMARY - jobs we'll lose to machines - and the ones we won't**  
  
Anthony Goldbloom told his worries about his niece, Yahli, 9 months old. She has parents with awesome professions, doctor and lawyer. But unfortunately, at the time she will register her college, she will see a different condition about a change in most of professions and jobs, machine will replace the jobs. In 1990 to 2010 machine starts to accommodate people jobs, such as sorting the letter by scanning the zip code or assessing the credit risks. It has been years the inventors try to conduct a research and invention to bring in a new and smarter machine. After couple years the sophisticated of machines go far more and result a high volume and frequent machine to replace human's task. For examples, reading million essay in a minute while a teacher read 10.000 millions for decades. Beside that other up-to-date machine that human cannot compare is diagnose million of eyes in a minute while the experts have a limit power to do that in a day. In next 20 years, machines will be greater and smarter which impossible to manpower to compete with. But, there are some occupations that even the best technology in the world cannot handle except human, for instance, tackle a novel situation, design a business strategy, do make a marketing campaign, and solve a problem. A machine cannot find a solution when a new problem comes up, it cannot create a strategy to attract the consumers or hold an event to do a campaign in front of public. So Anthony Goldbloom, suggest her niece to keep moving everyday and discovery the days, decide what she want to do and what she want to be without be afraid the machine will take all the opportunity she probably has.
Hi Rosa... I hope the followings will help.  
  
But(you don't need to put "but") unfortunately,  
  
Since you write about a Past event, please utilize "Simple Past Tense" instead of Future Tense (at the time she will register her college, she will see a .... In 1990 to 2010 machine starts to ...).  
  
Please pay attention to the flow of your writing and its sense of meaning. Thank you.
Hello  
You have a good summary  
I have some corrections  
  
Anthony Goldbloom told ~~his~~ worries about his niece,...  
... awesome professions, **which are**doctor and lawyer. ~~But~~ Thus, unfortunately, (...) her college, ~~she will~~ and see a (...) a change in**the** most of professions ...  
... to accommodate people jobs, ~~such as~~ which are sorting the ...  
... sophisticated of machines ~~go far more~~ go further and **the**result **is** a high volume and ...  
~~But~~ Thus, there are some occupations (...) except human, ~~for instance~~ there are several example,**which are** tackle a novel situation...  
~~So~~ Therefore, Anthony Goldbloom, suggest (...) and what she want to ~~be~~ without be afraid the machine**and** will take all the ...  
  
You can added conjuction between the line and introduction in the first paragraph.
~~In~~ FROM 1990 to 2010 [NEED COMMA] machine ~~starts~~ HAS STARTED to accommodate people jobs, ...  
... try to conduct a research and BRING invention ~~to bring in a~~ FOR newER and smarter machineS. After A couple OF years [NEED COMMA] the ~~sophisticated of machines~~ MACHINE UPDATES go far more and resultED IN a high volume ...  
  
For examples, ~~reading~~ IT CAN READ million essayS in a minute while a teacher IS ONLY ABLE TO read 10.000 millions for decades. Beside that [NEED COMMA] other up-to-date machine FUNCTION that human cannot compare is ABILITY TO diagnose million of ...  
  
In THE next 20 years, (...) which impossible ~~to~~ FOR manpower to compete with. But,[AVOID STARTING SENTENCE WITH BUT] .....  
  
So Anthony Goldbloom, IS GOING TO suggest her niece to (...) without be afraid THAT the machine will take all the opportunitIES she probably has
Hello, rosadesiana!  
  
Your essay is good, but I would give you corrections  
  
1. ... most of professions and jobs, the machine will replace the jobs. The noun phrase machine seems to be missing a determiner before it.  
2. invention to bring in a new and smarter the machine. The noun phrase machine seems to be missing a determiner before it.  
3. ... go far more and result in a high volume and frequent ... The phrase following the intransitive verb result seems to be missing a preposition.  
4. For examples, reading million ~~essay~~ (essays ) in a minute while a teacher read 10.000 ~~millions~~ (million ) for decades. The singular noun essay follows a number other than one. Consider changing the noun to the plural form. It appears that the number millions is modifying a noun and should be in the singular form.  
  
Thank you
There are male lions, Majo and Motshegetsi, in Leipzig zoo in Germany damaging the fence and jump out of the cage before the zoo opened. Although one of the lions was back to the cage, another lion that is outside the enclosure should be shot in this case because of the personal safety had to take priority. They succeeded in returning one of the lions three hours later with the aid of a fence, but the other lion became agitated as they tried to calm it. Local media said Majo had survived, but Motshegetsi had been killed. The director said that the enclosure had been at the zoo for 15 years. They never had a problem before, but now they will review their security at that zoo. Crowds built up at the entrance to the zoo, but it was closed on Thursday because of the lions' escape. The last time lions escaped from their enclosure in Leipzig zoo was in 1913, prompting a widespread hunt that ended with all six lions being killed.
Hi..  
your essay is quite brief..  
I have some additions for your essay..  
  
another lion ~~that is~~[you do not need to give "that" as "outside" is already an adverb] outside the (...) in this case because ~~of~~["because of" is followed by object of preposition, not subject and verb] the personal safety ...  
  
... but the other lion became agitated as they[who do they refer to? it is a little bit confusing] tried to calm it.  
  
Keep writing..
Hello,  
Here some inputs for you.  
  
... damaging the fence and ~~jump~~**jumping** out of the cage ...  
  
Although one of the lions was back**ed** to the cage, another lion ~~that is~~**located** outside **of** the enclosure should be shot ~~in this case~~ because ~~of~~ the personal safety had to ~~take~~**be** priority.  
  
They*refer to?* succeeded in returning (...) became agitated as they*refer to?* tried to calm it.  
  
**Good luck!**
Daniel Levitin, the speaker of TED Talk, also known as a neuroscientist by training, commenced his presentation by sharing his stressful moments such as loosing home keys in the middle of a frozen night and forgetting his passport in the rush hour of his important business trip. Those happened consecutively and made him panic as hell. At the moment when he met one of his friends, he was given a precious insight about confronting a hard circumstance, namely prevention. This is when someone is able to figure out what might go wrong and minimize the further risk.  
  
When performing under a nerve-racking situation, the brain releases cortisol, a powerful hormone involved in the regulation of metabolism in the cells and helps people regulate stress within the body. Cortisol tends to raise the heart beat, boost adrenaline and create cloudy notion. As a result, someone is unable to think clearly. This is the right time to pause for a while and reconsider the possible impacts that might be occurred and how to prevent them. Prevention is effective to avoid foolish actions as well as for the decision-making.
Hi Fitri  
Let me give you some advice.  
  
... stressful moments such as ~~loosing~~ (losing home keys ...  
... what might go wrong and ~~minimize~~(minimise) the further risk.  
  
... heart beat, boost ~~adrenasline~~(adrenaline) y and create cloudy notion.  
... the possible impacts that might ~~be occurred~~ (occur) and how to prevent them.  
  
Keep writing...
Toughie, the world's last Rabbs' fringe-limbed tree frog and a symbol of the extinction has died in the Atlanta Botanical Garden. He was captive in 2005 with a lot of attention had been paid until he has his own Wikipedia page.  
  
His captivity triggered the description of his own species (Ecnomiohyla Rabborum) in 2008 after frog rescue mission by the Atlanta Botanical Garden and Zoo. The species occurred in a very small range that field studies suggest more than 85% of all the amphibians on Toughie's home were vanished. Toughie, the frog, had lots of admirers. Last year his image was projected to St. Peter's Basilica to make the world could see and hear him.  
  
Now he is gone and with him an entire species. Following that, we are going to lose almost half of all species by the end of the century. Likely the law of the nature, when the species go, so do we.  
  
news.nationalgeographic.com/2016/09/toughie-rabbs-fringe-limbed-tree-frog-dies-goes-extinct/
Most of the audience put their hands up when Kang Lee asked them if they ever lie in childhood. Adults believed some concerning about kid and lies. First, children started to lie at elementary school. Second, children are poor liars so we are easily to detect it. Last, if children lies at very young age, they must become pathological liars for life. All of three beliefs are wrong. The researcher convinced children to play guessing cards and the winner will get big gift but the researcher get out the room and told the children to do not peek the card. As soon as the teacher left the room, they peek the cards. A research in elementary school showed more than 80% children were peek the cards as soon as the teacher get out from the room and they lied about it. Lying is typical parts of development, they starts lie as young as 2 years old. Kang Lee also told that there were two main ingredients to make a good lying. First ingredient is mind reading, an ability to know that different people have different knowledge. Second is ability to control their facial expression, their speech, and body language known as self control. Young children have more mind-reading and self control ability, but in the future, we will easily to detect their lies using lie-detection technology that can reveal our hidden lies.