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**Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.  
  
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Whether the extinction of individual plant and animal species should be the main environmental problem of our time is debatable. Some people consider this loss of species to be less important than other environmental issues.  
  
It is true that the disappearance of particular flora and fauna can have a detrimental effect on both the ecosystem and human lives. When one species die out, other species in this food chain will be affected considerably. Aside from having less food, the number of some species will increase dramatically while the population of others will reduce. In other words, the ecosystem is no longer in balance when one species become extinct. Furthermore, the next human generation has no opportunity of observing the diversity of our ecosystem as well as witnessing and learning more about certain species because of their extinction.  
  
However, some people believe that the falling number of particular species is just one of Nature's ruthless tests to cross out the weak and keep the fittest. They think that instead of focusing on protecting rare or dying species, we should pay more attention to other important issues such as climate change and pollution. Over the past few years, climate change has resulted in rising sea level that leads to frequent flooding in low areas and the gradual shrinking of habitual land and islands. Apart from that, pollution also affects many aspects of our lives negatively. As a consequence of pollution, food and home become increasingly scarce while human health deteriorate. If the main contributors to these problems take no urgent actions to cease or delay them, there will be no hope for the human future.  
  
Although the loss of certain flora and fauna is detrimental, I believe we should focus more on ceasing climate change and pollution because if they continue, there will be less land and less food for everyone, including animals and plants.  
  
In conclusion, people should pay more attention to other important environmental issues that are more significant than the extinction of particular flora and fauna.  
  
*I hope you will read my essay and give feedback on it. Thanks in advance!!!*
The writer needs to be familiar with the one major rule of writing this type of essay, the public opinion explanation matters equally to that of the personal opinion. A personal opinion can only be witten after a full explanation of the public support. Then the with can write a supporting or non - supporting opinion of his own reasons. Both opinions cannot be correct as a personal assessment is required. Compare the public to the personal opinion. The discussions cannot be based on the personal alone. Neither can thepublic opinions be discussed in the same or a single paragraph, That is an auto fail based on improperly developed reasoning and lack of justification for both public beliefs. Discuss each public opinion per paragraph, then blend the personal opinion into it for maximum comparison score effectively.
## IELTS WRITING - TASK 1 - DEVELOPMENT OF STOKEFORD VILLAGE

  
  
**The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**  
  
The diagrams illustrate how the village of Stokeford had changed over an 80-year period, from 1930 to 2010.  
  
Overall, the village developed substantially over the course of 80 years with the increase of accommodation and infrastructure, resulted in the sacrifice of farmland areas.  
  
As the first map reveals, Stockford village is located on the east bank of the River Stoke and in 1930, it was relatively undeveloped. There was a sole main road started from a bridge in the north with several houses on both sides. Additionally, the town center was also constituted by a primary school, a post office, some shops and a large house within gardens. Meanwhile, the areas in the northeast and southwest corners were deployed for agricultural purposes.  
  
However, the village had growth dramatically by 2010. The farmland areas had been completely cleared to make way for more houses and roads construction. Similarly, the large house had been demolished and supplanted by a bigger retirement home, whereas the gardens surrounding it had reduced in size. Another development was experienced in the primary school, which had been upgraded with two additional buildings. On the other hand, the original bridge and post office had been intactly preserved throughout the given period.  
  
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Though the grammar presentation is problematic in terms of word usage and time references, the description is mostly on point. There was an image identification mistake at the start. The images are illustrations rather than diagrams. Diagrams relate to process instructions. Illustrations are drawings related to changes or adaptations in an area. Avoid exaggerated word or phrase use like"sacrifice of farmland." Since the drawings do not support a claim in relation to sacrifice, such erroneous claims must be avoided as it pertains to report accuracy.  
  
The good news is that the report is still understandable on the reader's end. While perfect grammar is not expected, this is an example of understandable and clear imperfect grammar writing. The writer just needs to perfect his writing skills from this point. Suggestion: Do not say " On the other hand " if there is me reference to"On the one hand " in the previous paragraph.
## fast food consumption chart

  
  
*TOPIC:  
The chart illustrates the consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.*  
  
MY ANSWER:  
  
The line graph depics three types of fast food which includes hamburgers, pizza and fried chicken consumed by Mauritius teenagers between 1985 to 2015.  
  
Overall, the quantity of teenagers having hamburgers and fried chicken per year showed a significant rise over the period, while the number of pizza eaten experienced a downward trend.  
  
In 1985, teenagers ate hamburgers and Fried chicken approximately 10 and 5 times per year respectively. After an initial increase until 1995, the number of fried chicken eaten increased sharply from 20 to 40 times per year within a decade, exceeding the number of pizza and hamburgers in 2000 and remains steadily after 2005.With a similar trend, the consumption of hamburger increased steadily and reached 70 times per year in 2015. Marked as the most popular fast food.  
  
In contrast, teenagers consumed pizza 60 times per year in 1985. It decreased rapidly throughout the period and end at 10 times per year. The number of pizza eaten was the highest among these three fast food and it ended as the lowest in 2015. It was out traced by both hamburger and Fried Chicken in 2000.  
  
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The summary is incorrect. It does not refer to the correct topic, proper nationality reference for people from Mauritius, nor indicate the correct measurement type. It is not a paragraph but a score reducing run- on presentation. It will force a low starting TA score for the report.  
  
The paragraph presentations need to have a uniform length and avoid incidental run-on presentations. The word usage is acceptable but the student shows a severe focus on that scoring section alone. The word usage is forced and unnatural because of this incorrect effort on the port of the student. A balance must be found between academic and everyday ward usage.  
  
The tending presentation is referred to only once. The writer tends to create a number of these throughout the presentation.
## The given chart illustrates how much wastes was collected by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015.

  
Overall,the total amount wastes collected each year followed similar trends.Additionally,the paper was the most collected type by a recycling centre and the reverse was true for the garden wastes.  
  
As can be seen from the figure,in 2011,paper was just the most collected category,at nearly 60 tons,closely followed by the glass waste which is 48 tons.The tin waste ranked third with 35 tons.The smallest belonged to garden waste which was approximately 30 tons.  
  
The amount of collected waste paper hit the lowest point in 2013 ( with 40 tons) before increasing to over 70 tons which reached the peak in 2015.On the one hand,the figures for the other type of waste all witnessed fluctuation throughout the period with 52 tons of glass,39 tons of tin and 35 tons of garden waste being collected in the past year  
  
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The writer is showing an unfamiliarity with writing rules by being disrespectful to the reader. Caps lock writing in bold black letters indicates that the writer wrote in "screaming mode" at the examiner which poses a GRA scoring problem. several academic writing rules were vviolated in that paragraph presentation. The writer should not make ita habit of writing in this format due to the potential for heavy scoring deductions.  
  
The writer continues to ignore sentence spacing requirements in the presentation. the space bar must be pressed after every period before the next word to place a reading space and pause in- between sentences. The writer is looking at a failing GRA score based on these writing rule violations. These deductions will lower the final to a possibly failing one.
## human impact on environment

  
  
In this day and age,environmental problems are the primary concern of the world.  
While humans are responsible for damages to the environment,we also can take action to solve these issues.My essay below will indicate main environmental problems and some measures that governments and individuals can take to tackle these problems.  
  
To begin with,two major threats to our environment nowadays are air pollution and waste.In the first place, due to the development of industrialization,there is a rise in gas emissions from factories into the air.Besides,the great demand for transportation leads to the increasing amount of exhaust from vehicles.These are main factors contributing to the atmospheric contamination which has devastating effects on people health.In the second place,as a result of population growth and the rising popularity of packaged products, we are producing a greater quantity of rubbish,leading to air pollution and river impurity.  
  
Despite the intensity of the above problems,it is completely possible for us to deal with. On a large scale,governments should pass laws to cut down on the sheer volume of air pollution.In addition,it is essential for local authorities to encourage factories and companies to use renewable resources such as solar energy and wind energy. On individual levels,in order to lessen the exhaust fumes from transports,it would be better off curtailing the use of private vehicles like cars. Instead, we can take public transports for long distances and bicycles for short ones. On top of that,individuals can reduce waste by giving more priority to products with less packaging and those which are recyclable and reusable.For instance,because plastic bags are extremely difficult to decompose,many supermarkets now provide their customers with reusable ones.The aforementioned measures play a vital role in addressing environmental issues.  
  
All in all,human beings are destroying the environment with little awareness. Hence,both governments and individuals must take steps to combat related problems and safeguard our green planet.  
  
**I hope you will read and give feedback on my paper!**
Based on the original prompt, this discussion must be composed of 3 discussion and reasoning paragraphs. The individual paragraph topics are as follows:  
  
Paragraph 2: Ways in which humans are damaging the environment.  
Paragraph 3: What can governments do to address these problems?  
Paragraph 4: What can individual people do?  
  
The present discussion paragraphs do not do a good job of addressing these questions fully as the topics are barely explained and often combine topics in paragraphs, creating mentions rather than developed explations that are based on:  
  
- reasoning merit  
- relevant examples  
- supporting ideas  
  
Both of which should be discussed in relevant paragraphs using an expanded presentation form. The writer makes zero effort to create cohesive topic paragraphs or paragraph content, further reducing the quality of work in the presentation.
## the time that visitors spend in the Kingsland resort

  
  
The charts depict the estimated alternations in how long visitors abide in the seaside eco-resort of Kingsland at the present and in the next five years. In general, it is expected that people will prefer longer stays.  
  
The first striking feature is the anticipated decrease in a stay of one night. At the current, one-night break makes the bulk of current lengths of stay with 60% of the total but in the five years of projection, this is forecast to drop substantially to 20%. By contrast, a similar trend will be true of two-night and three-night stays. In detail, they are both estimated to experience a remarkable jump, constituting 10% and 24% respectively.  
  
Also noticeably, the breaks of one week and one week plus account for 7% of total the length of stay, while it is forecast that the figure will increase marginally to 10%.
The essay does not meet the necessary analytical, reporting, and comparison discussion requirements. There should be at least 150 words in this presentation to meet the minimum writing standards for score awarding. I see only 145 words in this presentation. It is definitely not a passing representation of the provided image data. The writer did not consider the scoring requirements for writing such as:  
  
- The chart type / specific image identification  
- A trending statement based on maximum year projections  
- Proper measurement breakdown based on yearly presentations  
- Incorrect simple and complex sentence presentations  
- Varied punctuation marks, measurement, and numerical usage based on GRA requirements  
  
These corrections must be applied in the next practice essay to achieve passing consideration.
***In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.***  
## What are the reasons for this?How can people research it?

  
  
There has been an ongoing trend that the background of the house or building is the fascination citizens researching curiously in popularity. There are several reasons leading to this phenomenon and some viable methods coming in useful to gain it.  
  
The primary reason of discovering is edifying variety major fields through history. Due to gaining knowledge of history of house and building, awareness not only of the co-existed culture but also the temporary economy and industry can be raised. Numerous houses and buildings were built in the situations related to historical highlights. Furthermore, understanding building history is ascribed as a motivation for the flourish of the construction industry in the new cutting-edge. Several technologies can be developed and accomplished in reality based on the classical ones.  
  
In order to perceive the aforementioned knowledge, several actions can be taken. Firstly, investing in books which are the most functional systems to perceive. According to the information recorded, people can approach the events from an accurate angle. At the same time, locals who have experienced that period can be seen as a proficiency teacher inspiring perception within enthusiasm. Secondly, in the digital era the Internet is capable of providing countless realizations and communities that include people have the same purpose in researching building history.  
  
In conclusion, learning more about history not only leads to the profits in viable aspects in the modern life but also promoting the development of the mentioned industry. Various measures can be taken to tackle the researching in the more constructive way.
This is one of the most confusing essays ever to be posted at this forum. The obvious transliteration of the text from the writer's native language to English caused this situation. The way the sentences were structured makes it appear as if the writer did one of 2 things:  
  
- used a language translation software in an unsuccessful manner  
- used a thesaurus without considering different word usage meaning or scenarios.  
  
It is difficult to assess if the winter would have a chance ata passing score with this essay due to the confusing and stressful presentation. The examiner will find it difficult to easily comprehend what is being implied in the writing.
## best qualities for recruitment

  
  
In nowadays industrialized world, labor force plays an inevitable role In every enterprise and corporation, therefore, it is often considered that initial traits are the key factor of recruitment when compared to another elements. I can partially agree that employers should pay more attention to employees' individual qualities, since their education and working experience are also not less important.  
  
On the one hand, while qualifications can be achieved within a couple of years, personal values and appropriate talents for certain jobs are human nature, which makes recruiters should estimate this criterion over the others . Besides, individuals with superior personalities can greatly boost the business of their company with their enthusiasm, strong commitment and even creativity. For example, some of the world's greatest men including Bill Gates and Steve Jobs, both of whom didn't graduate from universities but made huge differences that changed the world thanks to their outstanding traits.  
  
On the other hand, however, there are many jobs that require high level of education and certain qualifications. These requirements are crucial standards to illustrate that a person have full ability to practice in some domain. To be a doctor, for instance, a man has to study for average 5 to 7 years along with a dozen training courses of surgery practicing, afterward he can cure people. Supposed that that doctor weren't qualified, the aftermath on his patients would be so cruel that they could even die because of his inexperience and lack of knowledge.  
  
To sum up, this essay somewhat agree with the opinion of personality's priority over education and working experience regarding recruitments for certain reasons.
It is not the response of the writer is incorrect because, it is not. The writer understood the question and offered a relevant response. The problem is in the quality of the writing. The writer has a problem presenting clear thoughts in the paragraphs. Sentence formation based on proper word selection, usage, and positioning are not his strong suits. These are the sentence writing limitations of the writer that affected the clarity and easy understanding of the presentation. By incorrectly focusing on word choice rather than using simple references in the presentation, the writer unintentionally over- complicated the writing and removed the basic clarity of the explanation. it is this writing approach that produced errors in the paragraph presentations.
***Some people say that outdoor activities bring benefits to children's development rather than computer games.***  
## To what extent do you agree or disagree?

  
  
It is true that these days, a large number of children are predisposed to computer games as a way of recreation after an exhausting period at school. Some argue that engaging in outdoor activities is more beneficial for the development of children than playing video games and I strongly agree with this school of thought.  
  
On the one hand, there are compelling reasons why playing computer games should be deemed detrimental for children's development. Chief of these is that this kind of entertainment may involve inappropriate scenes, especially violent ones that can take a toll on children's perception. These days, game-making companies tend to provide gamers with more special tools used for battles, leading to more violent fights in games. The corollary of such action is that children are likely to behave brutally to people around them in a similar way to fighting against their rivals in games, leading to higher risk of committing offences when they grow up. In addition, prolonged exposure to screen may result in certain health problems, including obesity and worsening eyesight, which has increased in recent years.  
  
On the other hand, it is unequivocal that physical activities bring various benefits. First, taking part in outdoor activities enables children to develop social skills. This is based on the fact that by playing sports which involve teams such as soccer or basketball, children are able to enhance their teamwork skill. Furthermore, by engaging in real conversations with their friends when playing, they can not only develop their communication skill but also enhance the relationship with their peers. Added to this is that outdoor activities also prevent children from experiencing a sedentary lifestyle, empowering them to work out as well as helping them to avoid contracting bone-related diseases which would be brought by such a lifestyle.  
  
In conclusion, considering various impacts of computer games and outdoor activities in terms of health problems and social skills, I believe that the latter are far more advantageous for children and such activities should be encouraged more widely in the future.
The writer is not being asked to give an opinion about the topic. There was no need to cite a truth that altered the discussion topic/ target. He must not make unnecessary references in the restatement as that action alters the restatement by offering an unexpected opinion.  
  
The writer has a strong supporting assessment of the topic provided. Therefore, 2 supporting reason paragraphs must be used to prove his point in the witten debate. Indicate a perceived benefit of video games. Explain the benefit as the supporters all it. . Then, in the same paragraph, tear down the topic in support of your reason. strongly oppose it with valid reasons. That is how one recieves a high score with this prompt.  
  
In this case, only the paragraph related to the opinion is scorable. It will not be enough to overcome the scoring problems to recieve a passing score.
## rainfall NUMBERS IN TWO CITIES

  
  
The bar chart below demonstrates the average amount of rainfall over the year in two different cities, Moscow and San Francisco.  
Look at the graph, it is obviously seen that the rain season in Moscow occurs in the summer, while in San Francisco, it happens in the winter.  
  
According to the figures, rainfall happens all year round in Moscow. At first, the rainfall amount witnesses a downward trend between January and April, from 58 millimeters to 48 millimeters, but then it increases significantly and reaches the peak at 90 millimeters in June notwithstanding. Afterward, the amount of rain sees a slow decline from 82 millimeters in July to 49 millimeters in December. Whereas there is a tiny increase exist in August and October.  
  
On the contrary, San Francisco does not rain all year round. Moreover, the rainfall amount distributes unevenly, allocates particularly in December, January, and February at approximately 115 millimeters. In addition, there is no rainfall in either July or August.  
  
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