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The line graph illustrates society growth from 1800 to 2100, and the bar charts measure the population of urban in developed and developing areas. Overall, the highest world society on global and developing regions in 2040. However, the developed regions more or less stable.  
  
In 1800, the number of society stood at 1000 millions of people and increased gradually until 1960. Moreover, it had inclined dramatically to 8000 millions of people in 2040. Then, the graph experienced decreased in the following six decades from approximately 8000 to 6500.  
  
On the other hand, figure of the developing regions populations started at more or less 2300 millions of people and steadily inclined until 2040 with an increase less than 500 millions of people per years.  
  
Despite, Developing areas and Global population have the same peak in 2040, their are different of the number of started point and at the end of the period. Furthermore, the developed countries had the same number at approximetely 1200 between 2015 and 2040.  
  
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Hello,  
  
Overall, the content of this essay is good and understandable. You draw information from the graphs well and break up your ideas correctly. Your biggest issue here is grammar. I have given a few examples of things that can be corrected below. I hope this helps.  
  
For example, the sentence, ... is an incomplete sentence. It should read "Overall, the societies with the highest populations are predicted to be developing regions in 2040."  
  
... should read:  
  
"On the other hand, the figure depicting developing regions started at around 2,300 million people and steadily inclines until 2040 with an increase of less than 500 million people per year."  
  
"Millions of people" should be changed to "(number) million people". "Millions of people" is used for non-exact numbers but when you have the exact number, you should say "(number) million people".  
  
You should say "despite this,..." rather than "despite,..."  
  
Also watch out for period usage, capital letters, missing words, etc.  
  
Good luck!
Question :  
**The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions.  
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**  
  
Answer:  
The graphs illustrate information on the world population growth from 1800 to 2100 and show prediction the distribution of this population in developed and developing countries. The global population will continue to rise from 1800 to 2050 before it is predicted to reduce in 2100 and majority of people also predicted will be living in developing countries while the population in developed countries will in the same trend from 2015 to 2040.  
  
According to the first graph, the global population had slightly increasing from around 1000 million in 1800 to over 2000 million in 1940. But after this period, the population jumped significantly in 2040 which reached about 8000 million. The graph also show prediction that the population will experience a decreasing and drop down to just over 6000 million in 2100.  
  
According to the second graph, in 2015, the number of people who lived in the developed country around 1200 and it is projected to be in the same number till 2040. On the other hand, increasing will be shown in the population in the developing country which was just around 2100 million in 2015 and then will jump to 4000 million in 2040 as a projection.  
  
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Can someone help correct task 1 ielts & give some synonym  
  
The chart illustrate the proportion of proficient in foreign language in male and female student in different nation in 2016.  
Overall, the number of females proficient were much higher than the number of males in India, Romania, Vietnam and China. While, there was a different figure in Thailand.  
  
Among 6 countries demonstrated, 3 countries had the most striking rates in both genders. India reaches the highest point of female undergraduates skillful in foreign languages, accounted for 68% and 56% for males. Followed by that of female versus male in Romania, vietnam and russia, were 64% versus 42%, 56% versus 39% and 43% versus 35%, respectively.  
  
In china, the rate of female was approximately 31%, it was nearly two-fold than the figure for males. In contrast, the number of males proficient were higher than that of females in Thailand. However, the difference is very small, which was 6 (32% of males versus 27% females)  
  
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Hi, I will try to give you a little comment. I hope it can help you.  
  
In the Introduction, you must write paraphrase the title of the graph. "Percentages of students proficient in a foreign language".  
this is your writing "The chart illustrate the proportion ... ." you can make it more compact, {*The bar chart illustrates the percentages of pupils skills at six countries of foreign language in 2016.*}. You must make groups for your data. I see the chart shows there are 5 countries who woman bigger than man. You can say all of the countries or just mention the exception. For example, {*China, Romania, India, Rusia and Vietnam had the bigger data of woman who had the skill of a foreign language*.} or {*except the Thailand, woman has more percentage than men in all countries.*}. and the third sentence you can make a comparison. {*However, just Thailand had a bigger percentage of men than woman.*}  
  
So, if the sentence becomes one. it will be like this.  
  
{*The bar chart illustrates the percentages of pupils skills at six countries of foreign language in 2016. China, Romania, India, Rusia and Vietnam had the bigger data of woman who had the skill of a foreign language. However, just Thailand had a bigger percentage of men than woman.*}  
  
For the second paragraph, you can the positive data about the woman or the man. But, I suggest you make the biggest first of the categories. I will make an example. {IELTS writing actual test in December 2016, has data which five countries a dominant number of woman bigger than the man.}. It can make the first sentence in the second paragraph. After that, you can mention the number of percentages of the data.  
  
I will make a complete paragraph as a sample.  
  
{*IELTS writing actual test in December 2016, has data which five countries a dominant number of woman bigger than the man. The comparison for the woman and man in China was above 28% than above 14%. The data of woman in Romania was above 63% than 42%. The different data in India of the woman and man data was near 14% which woman near 70 and man at 56. In Rusia woman gets 42% and man get 35%. The last countries who had big data of woman bigger than man were Vietnam with percentages 56% and near 43% in a row.*}  
  
In the last paragraph, you can mention about the different data from others.  
And you can make like this, {*In the bar charts not only the woman got the highest percentages, but also there was one country had the man data bigger dan woman. In Thailand, the data gives information that man had near 35% and woman get near 26%.*}  
  
And my last suggestion, the data is not absolute in the line of the percentage. So, you can not mention the absolute data which not display in the bar chart. You can use near or above for making the easy writing task 1 for IELTS.
Can anyone help me to check about my leadership esssay? check on the grammar, check on the topic, or whatever, I really appreciate it your help!  
  
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## Commitment and responsibility

  
  
One of leadership skill I posses is commitment. I have consistently shown throughout my relationships and responsibilties to be accountable in both good and bad times. Beyond my commitment for others and my organization, I always finding ways to maximize my own potential professionally and personally. I know how to manage myself and make a reliable commitment without having to be told.  
  
Throughout my life, I have been blessed with the opportunities of being the head project officer of a debating championship in my university. Being the head project officer of the fellow students taught me what leadership is truly all about.  
  
Being one of the few students in my organization, somehow I was elected to be the head project officer of the debating championship committee. At first, I had no idea what I supposed to do since I had never been a leader of any sort before. Moreover, I had to lead the committee consisted of seniors from different majors, faculties, and characters for sure. I had never imagine, me, the youngest woman in the group had to be the leader of this team. Eventually, with the courage from my juniors, I decided that this was a great opportunity for me to challange myself and make my college years memorable.  
  
I faced many difficulties along the way. At first, I was all fired up to success this event. I proposed my ideas about what we should do to success this event to the committees. They aggreed to my ideas and supported it.  
  
Time passed, I found other committees had lost their interest in successing the event. Moreover, they postponed what supposed to be their job and finally I was having a hard time to keep in touch with them.  
  
At first, I was angry with them but then I realized that being angry was not an option if I wanted to success this event. After that, I tried to have more patience in facing them. I tried to be a good listener for them, I listened to what might have been their problem and why they could not do their job properly. In addition, I tried to be not afraid of constructive criticism directed to me about my way of leading everyone in my project team.  
  
Afterwards, aside of leading them in successing this project, I became a problem solver for everyone. I tried to solve the problem of the people in charge for the decoration and design, for the property,for the accomodation, and so on.  
  
Finally, after such efforts, the D-Day came and everything turned out to be successful. I managed to commit and responsible to my role in both good and bad times. Moreover, I managed to lead a group of young people with different characters in successing the event together. I believe that this leadership experience opened new doors to myself as well as to those of m
Dina, kindly provide the complete prompt requirement in your next thread. I need the information so that I can better analyze the content of your essay. At the moment, the response you have written seems to lack focus and a central theme. So I am interested in learning what the prompt requirements are. Once I know what you need to to, I think I will be able to tell you which parts of your essay work or don't work and which parts to keep or delete. The essay has potential, it just needs to be polished in the manner that the prompt requirement provides. We might need to change the way that you discuss your leadership skill to become more of a ideology presentation first, then example based discussion second. I'm not sure of which direction to lead you in at this point. I really need the prompt requirement to be able to do that.
Dina, the best way to start off your essay discussion is by revealing to the reviewer what your idea, understanding, or concept of leadership is. Then connect that to a discussion about how commitment is a leadership skill that has to be valued by all people because a leader who does not possess the skill of commitment is not an effective leader. After that, you can launch into the narrative about your leadership time when your resolve to the commitment of your duties was tested.  
  
The essay that you wrote became weak because you did not try to create a definition portion based upon personal experience first for leadership and commitment, if you work on presenting that section before you move on to the narrative regarding the event that you led, then the essay might work better. By the way, don't spend too much time on explaining how you never saw yourself as a leader and other things. Just present your leadership activity, without doubt or exaggeration. Be factual, deliver the necessary points and the essay will be better for it.
The line graph shows the particular people in the world between 1800 and 2100. And the bar chart compares the particular people of high-income countries with low-income countries over 25 years. The high-income countries have prediction steady trend until the end of the period of 2040 from 2015. However, the low-income country will increase significantly.  
  
The particular of people in the world increased significantly from 1800 to 1960 which had 1000 millions of people in the first period to near 3000 millions of people in 1960. And in 1960 the population increased dramatically to under 6000 millions of people in 2000. Then, the prediction will get the peak number of people in 2040 for above 8000 millions of people. The last population will decrease to under 7000 millions of people in 2100.  
  
The prediction also showed in the bar chart. The number of particular people in the developed country will always steady from 2015 to 2040 which had above 1000 millions of people in all of the years. However, the developing country predict will increase the population to 4000 millions of people from above 2000 millions of people between 2015 and 2040.  
  
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Hi, I thought your report was pretty clear, but I would make the following suggestions:  
  
The line graph shows the [number of] people in  
  
... 1800 and 2100[, while] the bar chart compares the [predicted population of] people  
  
...low-income countries over [the next] 25 years.  
  
.. countries [are expected to experienc ae] steady trend  
  
... the low-income [countries' population] will increase significantly.  
  
The ~~particular~~ [number] of people  
  
... from 1800 to 1960 [beginning with] 1000 [million] people [in the first year of the data shown, and steadily rising to nearly 3000 million] ~~in the first period to near 3000 millions of people~~ in 1960. [After] 1960  
  
... dramatically to [a little] under 6000 [million] people in 2000. Then, the prediction [forecasts that the world] will [reach a] peak number of people in 2040 [at] above 8000 [million] people. [After this apex, the] population [is expected to] decrease to under 7000 [million] people [by] 2100.  
  
[A] {it is not really the same prediction, so we can't use "the"} prediction also [shown] in the bar chart. The number of ~~particular~~ people in the developed [countries of the world] will [remain] steady from 2015 to 2040 [, at a value of somewhat over] 1000 [million] people [throughout the years shown]. However, the developing [countries are predicted to] increase [their] population to 4000 [million] people [by 2040, starting] from [slightly] above 2000 millions of people [in 2015]
Women in aged 40-44 years who had children in Australia is reported in a table over 25 years since 1981. Overall, the woman who has no child, one child, and two children climbed for the every year. However, the other category showed decreased percentages.  
  
In all of the period, the woman who has two children was the biggest percentages. In 1981, the data shows 29% and in the end of the period, the data showed 38.3% it describe the data increase 9.3%. The second biggest data at 1981 was the four or more children had 27.6% but in the end of the period, the data plummeted to 11%.  
  
The data of no children and one child from the woman in 40 - 44 years was increased significantly which no children increased 7.4% from 8.5% to 15.9% and one child increased 5.6% from 7.6% to 13.2%. However, Woman had three children decreased significantly from 27.4% to 21.5%.  
  
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@Citra07  
Hy Citra, good night, i have some corrections from grammatical error of your writing  
  
The first  
  
the correction is  
The women in aged 40-44 years who had children in Australia was reported in a table over 25 years since 1981. Overall, the woman who had no child, one child, and two children climbed for the every year. However, the other categories showed decreased percentages.  
  
The second  
  
the correction is  
In all of the period, the woman who had two children was the biggest percentages. In 1981, the data shows 29% and in the end of the period, the data showed 38.3% it described the data an increase at 9.3%.  
  
If you say past time, please use tenses of simple past. if you want to chane the word (increas) becoming Noun, you can use the article (an)  
  
Good job guys  
Regards
The table report the number of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia from 1981 to 2006. All in all, it can clearly be seen that the women did not had baby and the women had one child also the women had two children were an increase in all of period. However, the women who delivere baby at three and four or more children had decrease in all of period.  
  
In 1981, the women who had two children saw the highest proportion at just above 25% every year, whereas female who had one child and the women who did not have a child showed a gradual increase at less than 16% in all years. Furthemore, it was clearly seen that in the end of period, in 2006, female who borned 2 children reached a peak at 38,3%, while both of women who had one child and women who did not had a child witnessed a good performance in the end of period at 13,2% and 15,9% respectively.  
  
In 1981, the women who ever born three, four and more children had a decreased trend. In starting point, The women had a three and four or more children had a relatively same proportion for above 27%. Nevertheless, the women had a three childrean in every periode from 1981 to 2006 gradualy increase from 27,4% 27,0%, 24,6%, to 21,5%, while the women had a more three children significantly decrease from 27,6%, 18,9%, 13,1% to 11,o%.  
  
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Hello Hana,  
I have some advice for you :  
  
The table reportS the number of children ...  
~~All in all, it can clearly be seen that the women did not had baby ...~~  
(All in all, it can clearly be seen that the women who had no baby, the women who had one child and the women who had two children experienced an increase in all of the period).  
  
... a decrease in all of the period.  
  
I hope that it can help you.
Hallo Hana, I will try to correct your writing. I am not really good in a writing so I hope we can discuss.  
  
I see there are many wrong about the spelling of the word and some word did not match in your writing. But I will correct your content first. I will try to give my suggestion.  
  
In the first paragraph in the second line, you write "the women ~~did not had baby~~ " you can change to "*the woman without child*". And for this sentence " All in all, it can clearly be seen that the women ~~did not had baby~~~~and~~ the women had one child ~~also~~ the women had two children were an increase in all of period " you can make more compact like {*All in all, it can clearly be seen that the women without child, with one child, and two children were an increased in all of the period*}.  
  
In the second paragraph, you write "In 1981, the women who had two children saw the highest proportion at just above 25% every year, whereas female who had one child and the women who did not have a child showed a gradual increase at less than 16% in all years". In this paragraph, you should mention the right percentages, not "just above" or "less then". And in the first paragraph, you said about the increase and decrease of the data, not the highest or lowest data. And you use "whereas" it mean you compare the woman who had 2 children and women without a child and one child, but the comparison is not right. because you compare the highest portion of data with the increased data. I will try to make a sentence for you, {*In 1981, the women who had two children, one child, and none had 29%, 7.6%, and 8.5% in a row.*}.  
  
And for the third paragraph, you said "Nevertheless, the women had a three childrean in every periode from 1981 to 2006 gradualy ~~increase~~ from 27,4% 27,0%, 24,6%, to 21,5% " there are three words wrong spelling and about the data you should write decrease. {*Neverless, the women had three children in every period from 1981 to 2006 gradually decrease from 27.4% to 21.5%*}. Please be careful when you use comma and dot. for the number you should dot. (27.4%, 27%, 24.6%, and 21.5%).
Hallo, good night hanna, i have some corrections to you about grammatical error  
  
For the first  
  
The correction is  
... the number of children who were ever born from women with the age of 40-44 years in ...  
All in all, it can ~~clearly~~ be seen clearly that the women did not had baby ...  
  
For the second  
  
The correction is  
Furthemore, it was seen clearly that in the end of period, in 2006, females who were born 2 children reached a peak at 38,3%,...  
  
Good job guys  
Regards
The table provides the data of the proportion of children delivered by women with the age of 40-44 in 1981. Overall, it can be seen that the woman delivering children with none, one child, and two children chategories experienced an increasing trend, while the reverse witnessed in the remaining data.  
  
The two children category was dominated in 1981 and was followed by The one and the none child chategories. However, in the next 25 years of the growth of children, The two children still dominated in 38,3% while the none children in 15,9% which opposited the one children chategories in 15,9%.  
  
On the other hand, the four or more and the three children category grew up in 1981. Nevertheless, the three children chategory had experienced to increase gradually from 27,4 to 21,5% in 2006 while the four or more children chategory declined moderately from 27,6 to 11,0% in 2006.  
  
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Hallo Mahayyun Mappare, Good Evening. I will try to give you some suggest.  
Here there are :  
  
Overall, it can be seen that ...  
  
**it is better that :**  
Overall, it can clearly seen that the woman who delivere children at one child and two children, also the women who did not had a child experienced an increasing trend, while the other categories showed opposite trend.  
  
The two children category was dominated in 1981 and **it** was followed by ~~the one and the none child chategories.~~the women who did not had child and the women had a child became the second and the third highest proportion respectively.  
  
*Hope you much success.*  
Regard.
Hy Mahayyun Mappare, good afternoon, i have some corrections in grammatical of your writing.  
  
The table provides the data of the proportion of children delivered by women with the age of 40-44 in 1981.  
the correction, this sentences is not clear enough, if you want to use the complex sentence and to make easier for reader to read your writing, you should use conjuction in this sentences.  
  
like this one (The table provides the data of the proportion of children which were ever born by women in Australia with the age of 40-44 in 1981  
  
Thanks  
Hope you much success.  
Regard.
The table illustrates the number of children born to 40-44 years old women in Australia for four different years (1981, 1986, 1996 and 2006). It can be seen from the table that the first three categories had an increasing from the first period to the last period. While, three children and four or more children categories experienced a reduction from the first period to the last period.‎  
  
In 1981, the highest proportion of women in the age group was which has two children at 29% and then experienced significantly increasing until the end period at 38.3%. None and two children categories also followed this trend, having its increasing from 8.5% in 1981 to 15.9% in 2006 and from 7.6% in 1981 to 13.2% in 2006 respectively.  
  
Both of three children and four or more children categories experienced a reduction in its proportion. Women who has three children was 27.4% in 1981 and then dropped down gradually to 21.5% in 2006. While, women who has four or more children reduced significantly from 27,6% in the first period to just 11% in the last period.  
  
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