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***More renewable energy sources are harnessed to generate electricity these days. What are disadvantages and advantages of this trend?***  
  
Utilizing the renewable energy sources is favored in generating electricity. While this policy needs astronomical budget to operate, this also can decrease human's dependence on fossil fuel.  
  
It is commonly believe by the cons that the way of harnessing these newest sources invite others negative impacts such as the expensive cost spend and the advanced technology needed. For some countries, cost become the most common problem appear as it will also affect the government capability to provide the advanced technology. As the current research conducted by Japan Government shows that almost 63% of the country facing the need for renewable energy urgently is the underdeveloped countries that have not enough money to supply the research towards the renewable energy and its advanced technology. It is true that renewable energy need a lot of state spending.  
  
However, the counter party believes exploiting renewable energy to operate electricity is the only way to solve the problem of the depletion of fossil fuel. It goes without saying that the fossil fuel is slowly become extinct and the workable solution to overcome this problem is by finding another resource which has the same function to generate electricity. The study carried out by California University in 2009 showed that the fossil fuel will only appear after hundred years in the future and the renewable energy is the only alternative for human to survive from this problem. It is clear that the advantage of renewable energy is it can solve the problem of human's dependence on fossil fuel.  
  
Overall, even though the drawback impact of harnessing renewable energy to operate electricity is that some government should spent a lot of their state spending to provide the advance technology, it also bring advantage that it will decrease human's dependence on fossil fuel.
Dearest Kiki, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct my responses,  
  
*It is commonly believed*  
  
For some countries, cost become the most ... -->  
*In several countries, the most common problem occur often related to cost as it is consequently related to the government capability for providing latest technology*  
  
As the current research conducted by Japan ... -->  
*According to current research conducted by Japan Government, almost 63% of the country facing the need for renewable energy, including the underdeveloped countries, have not enough budget to do the research towards the renewable energy as well as modern technology*  
  
hope it helps you to improve your writing,  
  
regards
**The world of work is changing rapidly. Working conditions today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestion which can be taken in the future?**  
  
These days the labor of world has been different circumstance compared to several years ago and people decide to take more than one job. Unsatisfying salary to accommodate human's necessities is the trigger of this trend and a policy to set a minimum salary suited to the cost of living cost is a workable solution to take  
  
Recently, most of employees complaining their work which make them to change decision to look for one more jobs. This condition is because they blame the salaries they had received was very low and even expensive daily necessity demands them to look for more income. For example, there are several civil workers doing work in 2 sectors where they are forced to do it because it is demanded by the insufficient financial situation and facing changing times which are different where the position was forced to follow suit. It triggers them to take more one job is one of the way to fulfill their daily needs.  
  
Companies where they work should range the regulation to increase their low salary because high salary can meet their necessity so that gaps and welfare of employees are met so they do not need to look for a job for more than two. For example, research in Edinburg University shows that social inequality and welfare of employee due to low income they get. This really helps employees in fulfilling their necessity and makes them focus on one job.  
  
To conclude, low salary is one of trigger employees that employees do not meet needs so that they take more one job. In this trend companies should hire them should initiate to increase their salary.
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***When students are in large classes, it is very hard for the teacher to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this?***  
  
The large number of students in the class is the troublesome situation for the teacher to manage the class. By enrolling new educators and rearrange class management will be the workable solutions that can be implemented by the policy maker in the school.  
  
Adding some teachers in the school is believed can solve the over students in the class. New educators in the school can help to reach the standard quantities students should be in the class. As a prime example, a ratio of students in each class is 50:1, then when new teachers involved, it can be an ideal ratio such as 25:1 or even 20:1, hence it eases the schoolteachers to do individual attention to the pupils. The school authority should have the standard numbers of the students to know how many educators are needed to handle the classes.  
  
The additional solution to tackle the vast amount students is class management improvement such as making a group discussion regularly and seat arrangement. Group discussion not only helps the educators to be more attentive to their schoolchild, but also it is such a proper way to create hand in hand situation in the group and to build the sense of leadership among the group. While learning in a group enhance the team work of the student, seat arrangement helps the students easily to get the point of their teacher's explanation. In some cases, row arrangement of the chairs shows the lack of attention by the children who sit in the last row than in the first. By organizing the seat into circle, teacher will be easier to monitor each student and student can pay more attention on their teacher.  
  
To sum up, the educational authorities can implement a pivotal solution to address the over quantities students in the class by providing more educators and reorganizing the class management by doing group discussion and seat arrangement in each class.
Hi cachaaa,  
Interesting essay. however, a couple of points I am not clear. Perhaps, you should make some changes or insert additional details.  
  
Are you talking about class sizes for school children? college? or university?  
  
Can you include any research findings or suggestion from the experts e.g. high school in Singapore have maximum 20 students per class (Time Magazine, 2013). In Canada some special needs children receive almost one to one tutor because of their learning abilities. (Ascool.ca )  
  
Hope that helps,  
JC
**In some countries, government are encouraging industries and business to move to regional area outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages**  
  
The use of renewable energy to generate electricity becomes popular nowadays. while astronomical budget is required to undertake this project, the reduction of fossil fuel is the merit can be gained.  
  
On one hand, the cost of constructing infrastructure to provide renewable energy is unquestionable high as the limitation of technology as well as human resources are rarely available. When the invention of new renewable resources from living organism, such as, plant which can be extracted to gain ethanol to produce electricity are harnessed by community, they need advance machines which occasionally provide by big companies to do the process. Besides, only a few of expertise that can operate those machines and understand the process are presences to be hired to do so. As a result, researchers try to evaluate the effectivity and consequences to build such modern technology that can be used to produce electricity. They have found that producing electricity from renewable energy are 85% output outweigh the old methods, such as, solar combustion, and powerful machines and expertise to operate them are the main concern as they are twice expensive as harnessing from unrenewable energies.  
  
On the other hand, electricity that is produced by non-recycle energies shows more benefits than drawbacks, which are preservation of natural habitats and economic stabilization. As exploitation of resources from lands and sea need to be determined to extract fossil fuels, end of using non-renewable energies will conserve natural environment of mining places where most animals and plants live. In addition, the cost of processing the fossil fuel can be used in other economy sectors to develop certain goals that need urgent calls, for instance, accommodation for homeless and health care insurances. Group of scientists from University of Oxford agree and prove advantages of the prompt through their studies which result that burdened cost of extracting fossil fuels are effectively allocated for other commodities depended in every country needs and most of endangered animals and plants are saved because of stopping this exploration.  
  
In summary, astronomical asset to implement the project is undoubtable, while the beneficial of cutting down used of fossil fuel are outweigh its disadvantages. It is suggested that the cost of building such huge transform machines that need renewable energies to produce electricity can be gained by using the allocate budget from cutting down fuels.
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Let me give some corrections for your writing..  
  
1.such as, ~~plant~~*( put article a or the "the plan)* which can be extracted to ...  
2. to produce electricity are harnessed by ~~community~~*( the community)*  
3. they need ~~advance~~*(advanced)* machines which occasionally  
4. which are ~~preservation~~*(the preservation)*of natural  
5. ~~depended~~*( depended on )* in every country needs ...  
  
i hope my correction can be remainder for you writing...  
thank you..
***When students are in large classes, it is very hard for the teacher to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this?***  
  
Lecturer gave at the large room classes attended by many students is less effective and less efficient since the teacher will not be able to maintain and pay attention to each student. Obviously, the large classes loosen the teacher-student relation and disturb the concentration of student because the larger the classes used to teach, the more students attending to study and to overcome this problem, educational authorities should not only minimize the size of the class and limit the number of student but also suggest the teachers to change the way their teach student become more attractive.  
  
It goes without saying that the capability of student to pay attention in school is depend on the class atmosphere including the wide of the classroom as the large classes loosen the teacher-student relation and as the impact, it will disturb the concentration of students. A research conducted by Australia Government in 2010 showed as much as 75% of student is being passive and having less concentration while attending large classes and this condition is influenced not only by the large number of student come to the large class distracted their focus on the lessons but also because the teacher cannot notice and observe the progress of each student. It is true that the large classes will loosen the teacher-student relation as the teacher cannot pay attention to all students attending the class.  
  
The educational authorities have several options to tackle this issue. As the large classes will involve many students to join the lessons, if it is possible it will be best to minimise the size of the classroom. However, whereas the idea of minimizing the classroom is impossible, the educational authorities are suggested to train the teachers to have an attractive teaching way. Modifying the teaching way will be the best solution so that teacher can observe the progress of each student and get the full attention by the student as a current study carried out by Japan Education Researcher found as much as 65% of student become more concentration on the lessons while their teacher teach in an attractive way such as giving quiz and presentation. It is can be seen that minimizing the size of classroom and giving lesson in an attractive way are the best solution to overcome this problem.  
  
Overall, it is true that the larger the classes used to teach, the more students attending to study, so that it is harder for teachers to pay attention to each student. The workable solution suggested to the government authorities is to minimise the size of classroom and to train the teachers to have attractive way to give lecturer.
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let me give some corrections for your writing..  
  
1. the number of ~~student~~~~(students)~~ but also suggest the teachers  
2. the teachers ~~to~~ change the way their  
3.the way ~~their~~*( they are)*teach student become more attractive.  
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5.the more students attending to study~~,~~*( do not put comas)*  
  
may some corrections can help your writing..  
thank you..
***When students are in large classes, it is very hard for the teacher to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this?***  
  
A great number of students in one class make teacher difficult to give personal attention to them. A workable solution for this issue is the role of government in managing the number of student in the class and giving a training the for teacher to be more creative in teaching.  
  
One of the possible solutions to tackle this problem is controlling the amount of students in one class with regulation from authorities. The reason for this is to easier for teacher gives knowledge in the class. A great example for this situation is research at Cambridge University showed that about 20 students in the class make the teacher more convenient to deliver the knowledge for students. Therefore, it is true that the fewer number students influence teacher performance, especially when gives attention each student.  
  
Another solution for this condition is the teacher will get treatment to enhance their skill in teaching. This is due to the fact that many teachers need training to deal with many students in the class such a seminar. For instance, Education Ministry of Indonesia released the result of survey in 2010 that showed 70% of teachers experienced trouble while in the classroom with many students. It is true that many teachers still hard to control student especially with the significant amount of students.  
  
Overall, when class fells crowded since many students in there, the authority should launch rules such a policy to control the amount of students. Besides, the role of teacher is necessary so that government gives some exercise for several teachers to improve their knowledge about a good teaching method.
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let me give some corrections for your writing..  
  
1. the result of ~~survey~~*(the survey or a survey)* in 2010 that showed ...  
2.when class ~~fells c~~*(feels)* rowded since many ...  
3.a policy to control ~~the amount of students~~*( a number of students)*  
4.the role of ~~teacher~~*(put article a or the " the teacher")* is necessary so that government  
  
may some corrections are useful for your writing...  
thank you..
Dear JCWinner, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct my response,  
  
I followed with some onlookers ran toward ... -->  
*I and some onlookers ran to the accident scene, trying to help*  
  
As the SUV was (...) than the Honda, t he Honda had significant damages  
  
The collision caused both car [...] scattered distance away from both vehicles. --> you can make it in complex form to avoid repetition, for instance  
  
*Even though the collision caused both car windshields shattered all over the places, The Honda's radiator was totally smashed by SUV's front bumpers causing leak of hot water as well as rolled up on the car.*  
  
I look through the car door windows ... -->  
*When I look through the car door windows, there are two men whom are pinned on their seats with inflated airbag. Besides, the conscious driver was struggled to release himself from the airbag and seat belt.*  
  
it would be better if you consider to join your sentences with conjunction to form compound sentence or make complex one to prevent repetition. Hope you can improve your writing,  
  
Regards
**Question:  
  
Global warming is one of the biggest threats human face in the 21 st century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rate. What problems are associated with this and what some possible solutions?**  
  
In the 21st century humans confront the increase of sea levels caused by global warming. This will lead to the inundation of some area around the sea. However, people can make dam to restrain the rate of water.  
  
The principal problem related to the increase of sea level is the flood in coastal area. This occurs as the land is lower than sea level, causing a great amount of water come into the ground. This will lead to catastrophic disaster suffered by people living there like hunger and the outbreak of disease. A current report from the ministry of indonesia revealed that 75% of people inhabiting an area near by the sea are at risk of losing their home owing to the rise of sealevels.  
  
One of viable solutions which can be taken to deal with this issue is the construction of sea barrier along the seashore. This obviously would prevent sea water from coming into the land. Besides, it also can be utilized to generate electricity to support economic activities. Taking the Netherlands as an example, government built the dam to save the water and supply the water to downstream and canal. It is useful to balance the amount of water in this  
  
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In conclusion, global warming make a impact such as rise of sea level. There is an effect in an area such as coastal areas to the innundation. Furthermore, the manufacture of sea barrier along the seashore can be helpful to decrease the effect from flood and it should be become the long-term solution.
Hi mates, i have no doubt that you are great in writing, but i find several mistakes. Lemme show you  
  
... the amount of water in ~~this~~ these areas. or (this area)  
In conclusion, global warming make**s**~~a~~~~an~~ impact such as ...  
... as coastal areas to the in~~n~~ undation.  
Furthermore, ~~the manufacture of sea~~ by building barrier (...) from flood and it ~~should~~ can ~~be~~ become the ...
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One of the viable solutions which can be ...  
~~This~~ obviously, it would prevent sea water ~~from~~ coming into the land.  
  
... as an example, the government built the dam ...  
  
In conclusion, global warming makes an impact ~~such as rise~~ of sea level. There is an effect in ~~an area such as~~ coastal areas to the ~~innundation~~inundation .  
  
Furthermore, the ~~manufacture~~manufacturing of sea barrier alongside the seashore can be (...) and it should ~~be~~ become the ...  
  
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Hello, this is my essay about the influences of the modern forms of communication. Please help me find out what is wrong. I extremely appreciate for any comments.  
  
Long ago, people communicate with friends via telephone, fax, letters...There life was more realistic. Nowadays, people usually use Internet communicate. They make friends with people all over the word, but they spend less time to meet friends and family in real life. However, it is not so certain that this has caused negative effects for people.  
  
In the past, the amount of time people spent seeing their friends was more often, for instant, when someone's birthday, everyone came together and celebrated his or her birthday. They felt closer. Unlike modern people, they usually send greetings through social networking sites such as Facebook, Twitter, Gmail.....In my opinion, this is meaningless. Although they have lots at birthday greetings, but they still feel lonely. Moreover, when the social networking sites were developed, people were less interested in each other, they always hold the cellphone in hand, and immersed in a virtual world.  
  
However, the advent of internet also helps our life better. We have more friends, can know what are they thinking, how they look, what are they doing and the changes of the world. The communication becomes easier and more convenience than ever. People can study, run business, meet their friends without leaving home. As a result, our social relationship is extended.  
  
On the other hand, the modern life makes people too busy. They don't have enough time to care about everything around. They are rushing to do their job, so people no longer see each other much anymore. That's why we should not blame modern forms of communication for decreasing the time people spend seeing their friends.  
  
In conclusion as far as I concerned, people feel happier now, modern communication has improved our social life. However, we need to make sure that we should not be addicted to the social networking sites.
Hello qtraam, this is some correction from me and feel free to correct me too!  
  
Nowadays, people usually use Internet for~~communicate~~communicating with others .  
  
....the amount of time that people spent for seeing their friends ...  
  
... at birthday greetings, ~~but~~ they still feel lonely.  
  
Moreover, when ~~the~~ social networking sites ...  
  
....~~can~~ know what ~~are they~~people think~~ing~~ ...
Hii Qtraam..  
i found some mistakes of your writing. Lemme show you.  
  
~~Long ago, people communicate with friends via telephone, fax, letters...~~  
A couple years ago, people usually communicate by using several forms such as telephone, fax, letter and another one.  
  
~~[Nowadays, people usually use [...] friends and family in real life.(...)~~  
  
As the time goes by and internet has been invented, communication become easier where distance and time are no longer because of technology. However, even as a useful tools, the drawback comes at the same time.  
  
In the past, people took too long just for seeing each others even it was rarely happened t~~he amount of time people spent seeing their friends was more often~~ , for ~~instant~~instance , when someone's (...) celebrated his or her birthday and felt close each others.