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**In a developing country, what are the advantages and the disadvantages of living in a small village?**  
  
Hello everyone, today i have a topic to talk about the advantages and the disadvantages of living in a small village. Here is it. Could someone gives me some advices? please!  
  
Nowadays, people usually tend to live in the city where has more benifits. However, there are advantages and disadvantages to live in the country.  
Firstly, let's talk about the advantages when live in a places far from the city. People live in small villages where everyone knows everyone else, they usually garther to talk together. People form strong relationships and they usually support and help each other when they have problems, so they never feel lonely.  
  
Also with a more relaxed way of life, people are more helpful, friendly and generous. They usually take care of each other.  
Also the enviroment in the county is also very fresh because it not effected by the industrialization, so everyone has a healthy life.  
However, I think there are many of the disvantages. The education is a big problem, children are difficult to go to school because they can't pay for the school fee because most people just work as farmers.  
  
As I said before, there are not many companies or factories so if the young people have ambitions, they have to move to cities to get a good job.  
  
Also, when someone is ill, they cannot access to heath-care because it is a long way to the nearest hospital.  
In my opinion, I think people from the country side are happier than the ones coming from city side. However, there are more advantages to live in a big city.
Hello and welcome to the big family of EssayForum, a big forum to share and discuss everything about writing. Here on EF, all members can contribute and help each other by commenting on their posting, but be careful to not give a meaningless feedback. Now let's have a closer look on your essay. Here are several inputs from me:  
  
- ... in the city where has more ~~benifits~~benefits .  
- However, there are several advantages...  
- People who live in small villages ~~where everyone knows everyone else~~are usually knowing each other , they usually ~~garther~~gather to talk together.  
- However, I think there are ~~many of the disvantages~~some drawbacks on living in a village.  
  
You know how to deliver your ideas in your writing which is good, but you need to pay attention to the vocabularies that you use. In this case, there are some words which are repeated in almost every sentence; for example the word "Also". There are several ways to overcoming this issue such as synonym substitution or using transition words. Also, the more you read, the more you will know. Spend more time on reading and you can gain more insights regarding writing and its mechanic. Keep practicing and keep writing. Best regards
Hello everyone, today i have a topic to talk about the advantages and the disadvantages of living in a small village. Here is it. Could someone gives me some advice~~s~~ (uncountable)? please!  
  
==> ... city where has more ~~benifits~~(benefits) .  
==> ... and disadvantages to live in the country. (you already paraphrase the question but try another word) (nevertheless, living in the backwoods brings up several benefits, yet also gives a few drawback)  
  
==> Firstly, let's talk about the advantages(benefits/ merit)(of staying at the countryside)~~when live in a places far from the city~~ .  
==> People live in small villages where everyone knows everyone else(tend to make me confuse)(Inhabitants who live in the backwoods tend to known each other), they usually ~~garther~~(gather)to talk together(they usually come together for chitchat) .  
  
==> People form strong relationships and they usually support ... (they usually work together/cooperate to help solve any trouble) , so they never feel lonely (thus, they do not to face it alone/ no need to feel so long/ no worries to be lonesome, etc)  
  
==> Also with a more relaxed way ...  
==> Also the enviro(n)ment in the county (...) because it not ~~e~~(a) ffected by the industrialization, ...  
==> ... are many of the dis(ad) vantages. The education is a big (huge/ immense) problem, ~~children are difficult to go to school because (...) work as farmers~~(Children have to confront the adversity of paying tuition fee, due to the fact that most of the villagers work as farmer)  
  
~~As I said before~~(according the drawback above) , there are ~~not many~~ (a few/ fewer) companies or factories so if the young people have ambitions, they have to move to cities to get a good job.(make this sentence more easily to understand)  
  
==> Also , when someone is ill, they cannot access to heath care because (since, caused by, for) ~~it is a long way to the nearest hospital.~~(The nearest hospital is far away from the village/ it takes hard effort to reach the hospital/ it is miles away from backwoods)  
  
==> In my opinion, I think people from the countryside are happier than the ones coming from city~~side~~ (metropolis) -->how could you say that? give some explanation to strengten your opinion, by using paraphrase of the statement before) . However, there are more advantages(many / the adventages of living in the big city overweigth the diasdventages) to live in a big city.  
  
\*You didn't give any example at least once for each paragraph.  
\*Your paragraph didn't clear. when the next passage starts, there's no sign. at least give some space (enter)  
\*You often mention "also" --> furthermore, moreover, in addition, on the other hand, on the one hand, on the other word and many else  
  
\*You didn't mention the conclusion of your statement. The conclusion is a must for IELTS writing task 2  
\*some sentence is unclearly mention--> give some explanation  
  
Good luck and keep writing :)
Taklimakan Desert is one of the famous wilderness in Asia, located at Xinjiang, China. Having the level of broadness up to 337,600 kilometers, Taklimakan becomes the second largest desert in the world after the Sahara Desert in Africa. The majority of Taklimakan Desert's contour consists of sand dunes up to 250 meters high that are mostly consisted of plants.  
  
Three Taklimakan plants namely Populus euphratica, Tamarix ramosissima, and Alhagi sparsifolia have a specific character because they are fertile in the desert. Besides, each plant possesses various of kinds self-mechanism to survive. For instance, Populus euphratica manages distillation process by opening and closing stomata on the foliage surface in reaction to a couple of moisture being lost pass through the leaves to the covering air.  
  
Meanwhile, Tamarix ramosissima, the tiny cedar, popular as a salt tree, delivers the very huge volume of water through a remote root system many times the dimension of the plant above land. Tamarisk is able to dictate unconsciously when closing stomata to occupy evaporation and oversee photosynthesis.  
  
Alhagi Sparifolia, a spiny thicket, grow up in the Taklimakan Desert although it utilizes great amounts of water. Differs from Tamarix ramosissima and Populus euphratica which overt and lock stomata depends on conditions on the foliage surface, Alhagi Sparifolia does so follow the hydraulic conductance.
Hello Afdhel,  
  
... up to 337,600 kilometers, ~~Taklimakan~~it [pronoun ] becomes the second...  
... dunes up to 250 meters high that it are mostly consisted of plants.  
  
... as a salt tree, delivers ~~the~~are very huge volume of water...  
  
.., Alhagi Sparifolia does ~~so~~to follow the hydraulic conductance.  
  
hope these help
Hello mr. Afdhel, thank you for your comment before..here is my advices:  
  
... in Asia, located ~~at~~in Xinjiang, China. (If you want to use at, you can change your sentence into "located at Xinjiang Province , China)  
  
Three Taklimakan plants ~~namely~~such as Populus euphratica, (...) because they ~~are~~ fertile in the desert.  
  
... possesses various ~~of~~ kinds of self-mechanism to survive.  
  
... euphratica manages its distillation process by .....(or you can change into manages to distill by.....)  
  
..., the tiny cedar, ~~popular~~well-known as a salt tree, delivers ~~the~~ very huge volume of .......  
  
I think your writing is good, good job and keep witing :)
One of the oldest amusement show in the world is Circus. In the history, Circus was watched by a lot of inhabitants attaining 200.000 spectators. It had become the games with numerous of animals developing to be popular for centuries. Commonly, Circus was held in the midst of coliseums, arena and racetracks of long-standing world.  
  
The first ancient nation relishing the circus is The ancient Romans. About sixth century B.C, the city of Rome founded the Circus Maximus as a venue for the national amusement. Besides, the Circus Maximus also arranged gladiator match and the exotic animal display such as elephants and tigers.  
  
In the late 1700s, England grew to be the first state developing the advanced circus. Phillip Astley, an Englishman, established the earliest modern circus. He carried out his deed in the circle of the indoor arena and another of his breakthrough, within an indoor stadium. After his penetration became famous, he was requested by Louis XV to conduct such a show in France.
In that video, the speaker, David Kelly, talked about the way to build creativeness and confidence. In most of the time, people surrounding us gave a severely nasty judgment when we brought about the mistakes. Thus, it affected dire consequences in self confidence and creativeness causing people for tending to avoid a something new. In fact, this situation was not good as it was going to be the biggest barrier to develop their curiousty. To deal with this situation, he made reference to Albert Bandura, psychologist, creating a theory called guided mastery. In this regard, Bandura convinced people to deal with their problems, not avoid it. He did his method in several steps pertain to grow patient's confidence which is called confidence self-efficacy. Kelly also told a story about Doug Dietz discovering a medical imaging equipment. At the first time, Doug felt very happy since his invention was able to aid a large number of people. However, seeing the children crying because of being afraid of that machine, his feeling suddenly changed. Afterward, he decided to do makeover in his workplace like playground. Amazingly enough, it is work well and able to reduce the number of patients by 70 percent. Finally, speaker believed that creativeness and certainty were really important in our life.
**Writing Task 2: The advantages and disadvantages to being a people in a small village**  
  
Could you help me with my essay? Thank you so much!  
  
Nowadays, the majority of people moved to a big cities from their hometown to have a good condition to live. Comparison with the past, there were advantages and disadvantages to being a people in a small village.  
  
I think there were three main benefits when living in a small village. Firstly, when you lived in a small community you were never fell lonely because people knew each other and everyone usually spoke to each other. Secondly, the streets were safe, and people there were little crime because people there did not have material needs so much. So children were able to go out to play with other in safe. Also, children have a lot of friend to play with in the same village, so they learned social skills.  
  
However, there were a number of disadvantages. There were a few schools there, so children had to go very far if they wanted to get a high education. So that there were lots of children had to work in agriculture instead of going to school. Also, when someone was ill, they had to move a long way to the nearest hospital.  
  
In my opinion. I think living in a small village is suitable with my grandparents, because they were safer, happier and never lonely. However, in the modern world, there are more advantages when living in modern big cities.
Hello Samson,  
  
First of all, the most important thing is please to pay more attention about the question first. Unfortunately, your writing is less than 250 words here.  
  
If you want to answer the question properly, you must write at least 250 words in part 2 and at least 150 words in part 1. If you write less than these totals you will lose marks under 'Task Achievement' because you haven't answered the question properly.  
  
I think there ~~were~~are three main benefits when people are living in a small village.  
... in a small community you ~~were never fell~~felt lonely because (...) and everyone was~~usually spoke~~~~speaking~~ to each other.  
  
... needs so much~~.~~,~~S~~s o children were able to ...  
  
In my opinion~~.~~, I think living in a small village~~,~~it is more convenience because can meet together with big family.~~suitable with my grandparents, because they were safer, happier and never lonely.~~ .  
  
... more advantages when people are living in modern big cities.
Writing Task 2: The advantages and disadvantages to being a people in a small village  
  
Nowadays, the majority of people moved to a big cities from their hometown to have a good condition to live. Comparison with the past, there were advantages and disadvantages to being a people in a small village.  
  
I think there are three main benefits when living in a small village. Firstly, when you live in a small community you never feel lonely because people knew each other and everyone usually speak to each other. Secondly, the streets are safe, and people there are little crime because people there do not have material needs so much, so children are able to go out to play with other in safe. And if children have a lot of friend to play with, they will have a chance to learn social skills. Finally, small village is the healthiest place to live because there are lot of trees, fields and rivers and also, they have no factories or industry there.  
  
However, there are a number of disadvantages. There are a few schools there, so children had to go very far to study if they wanted to get a high education. So that is the reason that lots of children live in a small village had to work in agriculture instead of going to school. Also, when someone was ill, they had to move a long way to the nearest hospital, and it can be a big problem with some families. Moreover, because of the lack of industry there, there are just a few chances to work, so it is not easy to find a job with high salary and suitable to your abilities.  
  
In my opinion, I think living in a small village is suitable with the seniors, because they are safer, happier and never lonely when they live there. However, in the modern world, there are more advantages when living in modern big cities.
Hi samsons, here my thoughts  
  
the majority of people moved to ~~a~~the big cities ~~from their hometown~~ to have a good life condition ~~to live.~~  
  
... advantages and disadvantages ~~to being~~~~a people~~ when people live ...  
  
... in a small community, you never feel lonely because people ~~knew~~ know each other and everyone usually speaks to each other.  
  
and ~~people~~ there were little crime because people ~~there~~ did not have ~~material needs~~possession so much  
  
~~And~~ if children have a lot of friends to play with, they ...  
  
.., fields and rivers ~~and also~~ , they have no factories or industries there.  
  
That's it. I wish it could be help.  
Best Regards
Hello, My name is Gigih...Please help me to improve my writings and correct my errors...Here is my resume from natgeo's article...Thank you  
  
**Hurricane Matthew's Destructive Storm Surges Hint at New Normal**  
  
Hurricane Matthew makes seawater flooding into the seaside towns from Florida to California. Matthew known as the most powerful hurricane to hit USA in a decade will make the sea surface rising dangerously. The lawmakers are still debating about the climate change but in the other hand the sea level in their beaches was rose gradually higher than before. Altough the flood regularly at the high tide in Miami Beach and Fourth Lauderdale, the government in Florida does not accept the climate science. As a consequence, most planning that is being done occurs at the local level, where few cities and counties have the money to fund the kinds of big projects needed to adapt to their changing circumstances. According to the National Climate Assessment, the ocean along the East Coast is rising one to four feet, while storms are forecast to become more frequent and more destructive. When it became big disaster, more than 2 million people in the south-eastern states go to the high ground. Matthew's hurricane which killed hundreds of people in Haiti and 4 people in Florida had weak winds, sheer size, and slow-speed trek but the coast and enough rain saturated to cause flooding on top of storm surge. The scientist predict the sea surface will rise up to 3 feet in the next 2100 in Florida. As a result, the architects, engineers, and water experts proposed an array of concepts to add facility for prepare for a wetter future, so the rising of sea surface can be mapped.  
  
*Source: Laura Parker*, news.nationalgeographic
**How To Balances Between Life and Work?**  
  
Work - life balances means something different to every individual, It is important to achieve a balances between work time and leisure or family time, but too much work can result in stress and poor health, which known "workaholics" may neglect their families and friends.  
  
After all, people need to take regular holidays, even many companies expect employees to work overtime, but the companies should give their staff time to rest which is gathering in the beautiful places like beach or mountain areas.  
  
And here health and career experts share tips to help and find the balance that is right for us, as first, let go of perfectionism in intent to a lot of overachievers develop perfectionist tendencies at a young age when demands on their time are limited to get the job or other activities. Second, unplug it means like Brooks ever said if resilient people taste a greater sense of control over their lives, while reactive people have less control and are more bent to stress.  
  
In conclusion, a good work with life balances can raise the job satisfaction, and people who work sometimes need to refreshing, cause to espouse productivity of work and life needs good health and always happiness.  
  
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hi friend i guess your essay is pretty good ,but i have some advices for you  
please pay attention your grammatical error such as  
Work - life balances means something different should be Work - life balances mean different something.  
adverb and adjective place are located before noun in one sentence .if you want to make sentence where consists of adverb,adjective or noun .you can put adjective or adverb firstly and after that is noun  
  
you have to more concern about the plural and singularwords, for example,a balances should be a balance or without a if there are more than two  
  
i pressume a bit suggestions are enough for you  
i hope it can help you,  
thanks
Hi Pokpok, let me give you some suggestions regarding your writing:  
  
How To Balances Between Life and Work?  
  
which known "workaholics" (known as "workaholics" )  
  
... like beach or mountain areas such as gathering in the beautiful places like beaches or mountain areas.  
  
In conclusion, a good work with life balances can raise ... (confusing sentences, in the sense of meaning and flow)
hi pokpok 16, your essay is very interesting but i still find out a few existing error grammar.  
Firstly, It is important to achieve a balances between work time ... ==> let you choose etheir a balance or the balances.  
Secondly, people need to take regular holidays ==> i think you should use "regularly". when you use "regulaly", it would implement for "take", so you can impress what you want.  
  
... in the beautiful places like beach or mountain areas ==> 1. beach or mountainous area; 2. beaches or moutainous areas.
Hello pokpok16,  
  
~~After all~~ However, people need to take ...  
  
~~And here~~the health and career experts have been shared tips to help and find the balance ~~that~~which~~is~~ was right for us, ~~as~~the first, let go of ...  
  
... people have less control and ~~are~~ more bent to stress.  
  
... work sometimes need to be refreshing, that it caused~~to~~by espouse productivity ~~of~~ to work and life that theseneeds needed good health ...  
  
hope these help
Hi pokpok16,  
  
Your Essay is good enough...however you should pay more attention to your flow and its sense of meaning, thus you won't put your reader into confusion.  
  
Work - life balances (???) means something different to every (...) and poor health, which known (as) "workaholics" may neglect their ... (Those who are workaholic may neglect their families and friends).  
  
Thank you.
**Can you give me all your suggestions about this essay and the average score, please.**  
  
From the bar chart we can see the amount spent on consumer goods in thousand pounds sterling. There are four countries: Germany, Italy, France and Britain and six categories: Personal stereos, Tennis racquets, Perfumes, CDs, Toys and Photographic film.  
  
As seen in the chart, The United Kingdom prevails in all market spheres (which were mentioned above), in comparison with other countries in all fields bigger up to 160 pounds. As for France, it consumes most Photographic films, toys and CDs, all over about 150 pounds and the least in Personal stereos, Tennis racquets and perfumes, all under about 145 pounds. In addition, according to the chart, Germany and Italy are approximately of the same level if you count on overall amount.  
  
To sum up, Britain consumes the dominant part of all market goods followed by France with about 160 pounds in average spend, then Germany and Italy, which both lay out almost the same amount about 150 pounds in average.  
  
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~~From the bar chart we can see~~the bar chart shows information~~the~~ amount OF~~spent~~SPEND ( OVER VIEW SHOULD BE USE PRESENT) on consumer goods in thousand ~~pounds sterling~~POUNDSTERLING . ~~There are four countries: Germany, Italy, France and ...~~( ON THIS PART YOU SHOULD PUT OVERALL OR GENERAL VIEW)  
  
~~As seen in the chart~~the chart gives information that , The United Kingdom prevails in all market ...  
  
~~As for France, it consumes most~~while France spend more time on Photographic films, toys ...  
  
overall your essay is good; however you need extra effort to create nice flow on your essay.