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Sera, when you are asked "Which of the two methods do you prefer?" you are being asked to pick one side of the discussion to represent, support, and convince the reader about in your essay presentation. There is no need for a comparison discussion because this is an essay that focuses on a personal point of view. Your examples are good and your discussion is sound. However, I feel that the essay is too wordy which will cut into the time that you have for editing and revising the essay. Your direct approach to the response in the opening paragraph is excellent and expected in a TOEFL exam. However, your last sentence is a little bit improperly structured. You should have said, "Personally, I believe that..." Since this is your opinion statement, you must make sure to show ownership of the statement that will be discussed within the essay. Try to avoid overly long sentences. Instead, go for short but informative presentations so that you do not end up wasting time that can be used for the editing and perfecting of your essay presentation instead. Writing 250 words will be sufficient provided you took the time to carefully develop and edit your paper prior to submission.
*Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you aggre or disagree?*  
  
## road system vs railway network?

  
  
It is essential to building a sophisticated railway network in some countries, especially for those with vast lands. These governments believe that the railway is a cheaper way to transport massive products and travelers compared to cars or airplanes, producing less air pollution. However, from my point of view, building a broader and more convenient road network also brings us many advantages and can help increase the effectiveness of railway network.  
  
As I see it, although train has become a quick transportation tool in modern society, it still needs assistance from the other vehicles. Investment in building an extensive railway or subway network in urban areas is very expensive and usually takes many years to complete. In the period, the traffic will become very rush and affect people's normal living. Even though encouraging residents to take trains to work or travel can help reduce energy consumption and air pollution, but the train lacks an ability to take the passengers to any place they want. Because it is impossible to build a railway network to cover every street and district in a large country, and this makes the decrease on willing of taking trains.  
  
However, I believe that spending money on more well-designed roads and highways also can accomplish the same purpose as railways, moreover, it helps make a more comprehensive traffic network integrated with the train, bus, car and bicycle systems. For example, creating many cycling-only roads and bicycle renting systems for reducing inconvenience when people leave the stations, and this has been done in many major cities including Taipei, Kaohsiung, and Taichung in Taiwan. Another benefit is fixing and modifying structures of city road systems is considerably economical than subway systems. They do not have to dig a big hole or move a bunch of houses on adding a new track to connect a new emerging area.  
  
In conclusion, train and railway are critical components in a country's traffic system, but it is costly as well. I think the governments should also pay attention to the road systems which can be used to improve the efficiency of the railway.
Hsu, this essay will automatically fail because of its irrelevance to the TA requirements. The discussion is supposed to represent an emotional response essay based on a singular point of view. You not only failed to properly address the prompt instructions for the discussion in the opening paraphrase, but you proceeded to do a comparison point of view discussion based on a personal opinion. All of which combine to clearly indicate that you either did not understand the prompt discussion requirements or you chose to ignore the instructions. Either way prompt alteration took place on your part that led you to not even discuss the topic on a tangential basis. So this essay will not get a passing score in the actual test. You have to make sure that you understand the prompt discussion instruction line first, so that you can properly represent the required discussion. It will be best for you to familiarize yourself with the various discussion topics and how these are addressed before you proceed with any more practice essays. Samples of the essay types may be found, along with pertinent advice, on this forum.
## sharing music or films online

  
  
Nowadays a large number of movies and songs are available on internet at free of cost. I believe it is a very positive trend though it may seem financially negative at first for singer, actors or producers. This essay will first discuss about the the positive aspects of reaching the global audience though online and then outline the benefits of giving it free thus helping who cannot afford these.  
  
Distributing cinema or music online at free of cost will create a mass appeal to people and will be available for mass audience. As nowadays almost every single people starting form youth has a smart device. Giving these online for free will enhance there curiosity and they will watch or listen it as they are not spending any money. This will help the music or feature films to reach people beyond any geographical boundary. In a recent news in the Times, 41% of Hollywood online movie watcher are from South Asian countries where Hollywood movies are hardly available and they watch these online for free.  
  
On the other hand, these kind of contents enable the underprivileged people to find a way to entertain themselves. As per research, any kind of entertainment and recreational activities help alleviate anxiety, depression and other mental health disorders. Most of the poor people are not aware about mental health and are susceptible to mental hazards. If they would be able to get free entertainment contents online, it might help in their overall mental wellness. In 2014, a NGO named Pathtime distributed funny videos and melodies to locals of a South African city which were prone to mental illness due to poverty. Within six months a significant improvement has been observed with less people reported an mental condition.  
  
In conclusion, features film and musicals always had positive effect in the society. If these can be given free for all on internet, it may bring a revolutionary change in the society and world. Government can make a contribution to make these available for all with easy access.
Dear, if your letter is for IELTS, so its too long. in real test you will get only 40 mins to write it, it would be better to limit it within 280-300 words.  
  
Nowadays **,** a ~~large number~~ **myriad** of movies ... on **the** internet which ~~at~~ are free of cost.I believe it is ...[**poor introduction**]  
  
according to prompt this is not opinion essay, you need not to give direct opinion for this, i mean you used '' i believe'' , you can avoid this and try to write an introduction indirect ways for this.
## leading rice-productive counties in 1999

  
  
The bar graph compares the data about the leading rice- productive counties in 1999.  
  
In conclusion, China and India contributed to the total manufacture most whereas the USA produced the amount of rice roughly a twentieth as less as the figure of China in 1999.  
  
To begin with, the two countries standing at the top position were China and India with 192,971 tons and 122,244 tons in turns. Those countries got the significant figures of rice produce compared to 46,100 tons of manufactured rice in Indonesia which were the second rice-producing country in the given top ten, Japan and Philippines produced the quantities of rice a half as less as Viet Nam and Thailand with 12,531 tons and 10,000 tons of rice respectively. Moreover, the country having the least number of rice production was the USA with 8,183 tons in the ten countries.  
  
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Dear I have some suggestionsfor you, hope it help you.  
  
... compares the data ~~about~~  regarding the leading ....  
~~In conclusion,~~ overall, China ~~and India (...) most~~  has the highest rice production compared to the rest of the given countries, whereas the USA produced the lowest amount over the year. This is the overview of your writing, so you need to write main trend in this part. one more thing need to remember that it would be better not to use any numerical data here.
@phuonguyen479 This essay will receive an automatic failing score because you did not write the minimum of 150 words for the Task 1 essay. The minute you write less than the minimum word requirement, your essay will be automatically failed and you will not have passed the entire test. There is no partial scoring for this. Unless you write a total of 4 paragraphs with at least 3 sentences but no more than 5 sentences per paragraph, there is no way you will have enough words written for the 4 scoring considerations. That is the only way you can pass the test. I will not even bother to review the other parts of the essay that you wrote because it would be a futile exercise. I score and review the essays based on real testing conditions. As your examiner in this instance, I have no choice but to give you a failing score for writing only 143 words out of the 150 minimum word requirement.
**Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.**  
  
## gender (dis)parity in schools

  
  
There is an ongoing discussion whether boys and girls get benefits more at mixed schools or single-gender schools. Sometime separate school is proffered for its own attractions, while co-education has specific reasons to choose. This essay will discuss both the views in details to present my opinion.  
  
Students often distract from opposite gender in studying in schools. Naturally girls seem to study in cooperative ways, whereas boys appear to do it in competitively approaches. The differences in approaches lead a distraction in class-discussion usually. As a result their performance experiences a fall. Therefore, single-gender school is regarded as an effective way to address this concern.  
  
Co-education develops a better social communication between boys and girls. Mainly they allow them to know themselves as well as studying together. Their such experience turns an asset for their future lives. In fact using it may bring advantages in workplace as they have to work with opposite sex. Therefore, mixed schools are considered as a worthy educational system.  
  
In my opinion, students need a school where they are able to educate themselves optimally.  
Mix schools extend the chance of communication with opposite sex. However, single-sex schools reduce distraction among boys and girls. Eventually, the both are effective in different criteria. Henceforth, the two systems are remarkable to deliver optimal education.  
  
It is apparent that both the systems have considerable impacts on learner's development. That is why some are divided in two opinions in this regard. I would say that both the schools have significant role in education system.
Fiza, your essay is not good at all. You merely provided talking points, discussion topics, if you will, in each paragraph but aside from saying the same thing 3 times, you do not really develop the discussion paragraph with relevant reasons, supporting examples, and appropriate transition sentences at the end which will prepare the reader for the change in discussion topic and style in the next paragraph. You are just going around in circles in this essay without making any real impressive discussions nor properly developed sentences. You need to brush up on your English vocabulary and do more sentence development exercises using online available sources or mobile apps. The essay left me thoroughly confused and even less informed than when I started out reading your essay. It is important that you stop thinking in your native language and then translating it to English. That is where the confusion in the paragraph presentation comes from. Think in English, write in English. That is the only way you can practice writing fluency and sentence / paragraph clarity.
*TOPIC: SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT IT IS POSSIBLE TO TELL A LOT ABOUT A PERSON'S CULTURE AND CHARACTER FROM THEIR CHOICE OF CLOTHES.DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? 258 words.*  
  
## judging on the basis of an appearance

  
  
A personality of an individual is based on two factors, namely, customs and character.Sadly, most people consider that these factors can be judged on the basis of clothing.In my opinion, I totally disagree with this notion as people modify their dress-up styles relative to their environment while the character is a matter of ones' ideology.  
  
To begin with, people living in warmer states when migrating to colder areas must follow the costumes of that particular zone.To elaborate this, natives of Pakistan, wear western clothes while staying in colder countries.Thus, abandoning their own traditional eastern wear known as ' shirt pyjama 'because it would be impossible to bear the cold breeze in those cotton wears.Likewise, their preference would be jeans and sweater.Therefore, a person's convention cannot be determined on the basis of his attire rather it depends on surroundings.  
  
A character is based solely on an individual's faith.It is illogical to presume someone's individuality on the basis of their clothing style.To cite an example, recently in Pakistan and India, the cases of sexual harassment has filed up dramatically.The culprit behind such cases is mostly those who belong to an elite class or the God-fearing people, wearing expensive and modest clothing, respectively.Consequently, people consider them angels owing to their appearances which is totally absurd.Hence,it is better to assume the character on the basis of truthfulness and the behaviour towards others.  
  
To conclude, an individual's character and culture are based on his beliefs and circumstances, respectively.People should refrain from this idiotic act by assuming someone's personality and custom on the basis of their outlook.  
  
what we should use in place of shirt pyjama because it is shalwar qameez basically.  
kindly evaluate.
Maryam, you have confused a simple single opinion essay discussion with an extent essay. The instruction question is simple, you simply have to agree or disagree with the given statement. Nowhere in the given prompt were you asked about the "extent" or degree of your response to the question. This created a tangential response on your part, which affected the overall discussion. Your TA score will be close to passing, failing to do so because of the inappropriate response to the question. Learn how to identify the various question styles and how to write your response thesis sentence. Do not provide information not asked for in the prompt because that shows that you don't have any clear idea of what the instructions are and will affect your English comprehension skills consideration under the TA criteria. Unless you see the word "extent" prior to "agree or disagree", then it is not an emotional opinion response essay.
Question: *Some people say that it is possible to say a lot about person's culture and character from their choice of clothes? Do you agree or disagree?*  
  
## an outfit of a person means something

  
  
Answer:  
To a certain extent I agree that custom and tradition can be predicted by one's choice of clothing. However, I also believe that personality of an individual has little or no connection with dressing style.  
  
An attire of a person reflects its cultural and traditional values. Most of the People prefer to follow a particular dress code which is appreciated in their ethnicity. With time they get Comfortable along with it , regardless of time zone and location. For example , Muslim women prefer to wear a veil in order to cover their heads , called as hijab . They embrace this ritual and cultural identity with extreme gratitude and pride , wherever they go. By looking at this unique way of covering, one can perceive about their custom and religion. Hence, culture and way of wearing particular clothes are strongly correlated to each other.  
  
On the other hand, character is a moral and mental thinking of an individual which has no link with a piece of clothing. Personality of a person is completely a distinctive quality.For instance, a group of people living in a community and sharing same pattern of clothing,culture , religion or even sometimes same profession but their characters could not be same . Some among them could be pious and soft hearted in contrast to other stingy and cruel fellow members..In other words, criminals and common men are having similar type of get ups, where as their action and mentality are entirely opposite. On the basis of clothing, it is hardly possible to differentiate these two categories of wrongdoers and innocent people. Therefore, it is apparent that character has no relation with coverings.  
  
To conclude, I partly agree that outfit of a person gives an idea about heritage and customary ways , while nature of a person can not be define by it.
Dear, I have read your essay, you did not paraphrase your introduction that is why you have lose in TR criteria. Now I am going to suggest you how to develop a introduction in this types of essay. First of all you need to choose your supporting side of this prompt, then write the prompt differently changing word or synonym and different sentence structures, so that you can express that you understand the prompt fully. one more important think is that introduction must be 3 sentences at least.  
  
Hope it help you
Zainab, you did not understand the task requirement. This is not an emotional extent essay. Rather, this is a single opinion essay discussion only. You are not allowed to discuss both sides of this issue. You are to only defend one side using acceptable reasons and examples based upon popular knowledge and personal experience. Unless an essay specifically dictates "to what extent do you agree or disagree?" , then you are not given the opportunity to use a measured response for the opinion. Additionally, unless you are asked to "discuss both points of view and give your opinion", you should not do so. When the question is as simple as "do you agree or disagree?" then it is a single opinion essay alone. This mistake can very well prevent this essay from garnering a passing score in the actual test. When you misunderstand the prompt to such a high degree, your TA score will fail. Once the TA score is failing, there is no chance of pulling up the score to a passing one using the remaining 3 scoring criteria.
Hi all, here is the abstract for metal price prediction. My supervisor advised me to rewrite for bad grammar. Hope you guys can make comments for that. THANKS!  
  
## Forecast price, time series, ARMA/arima, accuracy

  
  
Metal commodity price is crucial in the profitability equation for mining industry. If assuming metal cost remain the same, profits will be expected to ascend with increasing producer prices. Thus, forecasting tools are important for producers to increase stability and predictability of metal commodity price. This thesis analyses the ability of two time series predicting models to forecast price for aluminium, copper, gold, zinc, nickel and lead based on observed historical data. Additionally, this thesis compares model outputs with predicted results from market to observe accuracy of two time series models.  
  
This thesis applies Auto Regressive Moving Average (ARMA) and Autoregressive Integrated Moving Average (ARIMA) time series model to predict the future metal commodity price based on past data from January 1990 to March 2018. The ARMA and ARIMA models with the lowest Akaike's Information Criterion (AIC) are selected from each series. The results show that the predicted value of model is highly fitting to the historic price in 4 months. However, ARMA and ARIMA are based on assumption of linear historic metal price and used for short run only, to detect small variation between the data.  
  
In real world, financial institutions such as 'World Bank' (my supervisor put comment 'plus many others' for 'World Bank') provides historic metal price and predicted price curve to public. Mining company will consider metal commodity price from market for maximizing mining profit. Thus, the accuracy of metal commodity price predictor in public is initially important for mining industry. The limitation of this thesis is simply predicting and analysing the metal commodity price by using time series models without any economic and politic factors from the market.  
  
Key words: Forecast price, time series, ARMA, ARIMA, accuracy
Hi everyone. This is my first time to post in here so I hope that someone will review my essay. I want you to know that english is my second lenguage before you start laughing at my mistakes and I hope that you will point them out so I could improve my writing since my test is in 2 weeks.  
  
*Television encourage or discourage learning. Or does it do both depends on circumstances?*  
  
## Television effects on learning

  
  
The issue of television having positive or negative effects on learning is a controversial one. Some believe the television encourages learning through different educational channels and shows. Others believe the television discourages learning because the primary purpose of it is to entertain. After careful taught, I believe the television has a positive effect on learning because it informs, inspires and educates.  
  
One reason for this belief is that TV informs us. Nowadays, when at least one TV is present in every house, it is very easy to be informed about current happenings all around the world. Just by watching news, we can learn about current events in politics, sports, economy, about the weather and natural catastrophes.  
  
Another reason for this believe is inspiration that we can receive by watching this "magical box." Television can inspire and give different ideas to children and adults. Depends on the show that is being watched, TV can positively inspire every individual. By watching a cartoon a child can be inspired to be just as brave, polite, smart and helpful as his favorite character. An adult can be inspired with different kinds of ideas. For example, a person can decide what to cook for dinner, just by watching cooking channels.  
  
The best reason for this belief is education. Children can learn their first words, colors, numbers, letters and shapes by watching educational shows. For some teenagers and students, it is easier to have a better understanding off of a matter if they visualize it. For example, students would learn better about historical events such as World War One, if they see a movie about it rather than just read about it.  
  
In the final analysis, television is a tool that is available to many. With choosing the right channel and show one can learn, be inspired and educated. Let's not take it for granted!