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QUESTION : **Nowadays, parents often let their children play a lot with computers and tablets in order to improve their technological skills.  
Do the advantages of the use of these devices from an early age outweigh the disadvantages?**  
  
## new technology in kids hands

  
  
ANSWER:  
In recent years, children is permitted by their parents to play much times with tablets and computers due to provide their sophisticated technological skills. In my opinion, it is agreed that these devices give the advantages rather than the disadvantages. Analyzig this circumtance that computers and tablets can make the kids smarter than ordinary typical age group and it would be fluencing their knowledge for the next grow up period.  
  
First and foremost, both of computers and tablets will improve children become briliant people in their golden age. Due to the fact that, in the beginning period of age supplying much more information could built their brain in the best condition. For instance, if an early age people is getting stimulation everyday from the gadget, it will stimulate the brain to record many types of data. So, extra-ordinary kids who familiar with the gadget have a big opportunity to gain excellent person. Additionally, toddler which is usual with gadget often obtain an achievement in their school. Because of, they spent the time for positive activities such as playing games, learning numbers, or watching videos from sophistichated things.  
  
On the other sides, using electronic appearance can be affected children's health. Owing this, if they are spending a lot of time looking up the media, the kids can get eye problem. It is caused that the kids wear a glasses to assist their sight. Moreover, utilizing media without parental advisory will be harmful the kids to see inappropriate broadcasting. So, parental advisory needed to control their child to reach benefit effect.  
  
To conclude, in my point of view the parents who give permit for the child to let using electronic tools provide positive effect rather than negative for their grow up period.
Hi .. Miss Tri,  
let me give you some suggestions,  
  
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kids who (need a verb) familiar with the ...  
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keep cheers,  
hope this helps,  
  
Moh. Jawahir
writing task 2: **Nowadays, parents often let their children play a lot with computers, and tablets in order to improve their technological skills. Do the advantages of the use of these devices from an early age outweigh the disadvantages?**  
  
## kids with high-tech devices in their hands

  
  
In digital native era, introducing gadgets to children in early age to improve their technological abilities are often conducted by their parents. Due to, they will realize early of the benefits of advance technology, such as computers and tablets which used by them to spend much of their times. Personally, i strongly believe this will lead them to achieve some merits by empowering gadgets to access some information around the world than demerits.  
  
To begin with, the development of technology by create some new tools likely, tablets and computers will make information are accessible. Taken an example, merely the people who stay in their home still travel in digital world by using some gadgets. This show, that the technology be able to open children's mind as an advantages to aware early of the sophisticated technology. Hence, it may provide the children a way to recognize how easy the world to access.  
  
Furthermore, some devices which children utilize are portability to operate. For instance, tablets and smartphones are used to surf in internet which is saved many information to be accessed. It is also operated by walking around your town or do some activities at the same time, while use it to explore news anywhere.Therefore, the utilizing of it may help them in their activity without trapped in front of computers in their house as a disadvantage.  
  
To sum up, early recognizing some devices to children will bring some benefits to their own life. They can access any information which they need, whereas their solely use their gadgets and it is portability to bring wherever they wanted. Then, it is the way to empower the advance technology to improve their skills.
Hi... Haris  
  
introducing gadgets (...) abilities ~~are~~ is often conducted ...  
to access some information around the world than demerits.  
= learn more about comparison  
  
technology by create = creating some new tools likely, tablets  
This shows, that the technology ~~be~~ is able to  
are used to surf in the internet  
which is saved (you want to use active or passive voice?) many information to be accessed  
whereas ~~their~~ (they) solely use their gadgets and  
hope this helps,  
many thanks,  
  
Moh. Jawahir
Writing task 2 : **Nowadays, parents often let their children play a lot with computers, and tablets in order to improving their technological skills. Do the advantages of the the use of these devices from an early age outweigh the disadvantages?**  
  
## positive and negative sides of gadgets boom among kids

  
  
In this digital era, parents believe that is more favorable to introducing the advance of technology for their children. Therefore, they are permitting their children to spend much time by playing gadgets as such computers and tablets to improve their tecnological skills which are very substantial in professional life. Analizing of this, i believe that the beneficial of conducting this rule is overwhelmingly than the detrimental effect, which are both will be written in this essay.  
  
The principal reason to starts kids off with learning sophisticated technology by gadgets is that this increases their ability on technology. In this era, it is undeniable that world work alarmingly the requirement of technological skills, that is why parents lead their children to improving their skills by using these devices. They thaught ought to preparing their children on professional life by practicing on gadgets. Let's take an example, children who used to playing laptops and computers have the higher proficiency on technology and they are becoming acceptable on professional work in their future life. Thus, these make it clear that permitting children to spend time on playing gadgets bring the advantages.  
  
Despite of the merits, we cannot deny that letting the children to spend much time by playing gadgets bring the drawback. Rather than improving their skills, they are becoming addicted to several features on their gadgets, to playing game, connecting to social media are for the examples. Relate to this, they have to managing their time as well as to improving their technological skills to avoid this demerit.  
  
Clearly, there are the positive effect of recognizing several devices for children which are outweight the negative impacts, whereas as can be avoiding with
Hi Miss Adhanice,  
your writing is overall good. Yet, let me give you some suggestions  
  
parents believe that is more (why is your verb "is"? where is your subject?) favorable to introducing  
to spend much time ~~by~~ on playing  
is overwhelmingly than the detrimental effect  
= learn more regarding to comparison  
  
the detrimental effect, which (this "which" refers to what?) are both will be written in this essay.  
that this increases their ability ~~on~~ on technology  
that world work alarmingly the requirement ...  
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They thaught ought to preparing ????? their children on ...  
Let's (no need to use construction since this is an academic writing) take an example, .  
... playing gadgets bring (where is the subject of this verb) the drawback  
they have to (this is similar modal of must, so as that this needs a bare infinitive verb after this modal) managing their time ...  
there ~~are~~ the positive (...) for children ~~which~~ who are outweight (see spelling) the negative impacts...  
keep cheers,  
hope this helps,  
many thanks  
  
Moh. Jawahir
QUESTIONS  
**Nowadays, parents often let their children play a lot with computers and tablets in order to improve their technological skills.  
Do the advantages of the use of this device from an early age outweight the disadvantages?**  
  
## an idea to familiarize children early with new gadgets

  
  
ANSWER  
Gadgets offering technology to create live more pleasent than before. Several people argue wheater learn gadget earlier would develop sophisticated childern become technology expert in the future. i completly convince that access to gain job are easier than other would be possible for them.  
  
Modern people cannot deny that these whole word need people who capable with cutting - edge technology. A lot of parents should aware that their children are feasible to absorb effect on learn technology earlier, one possible consequence is world in the future seek people who well - known about gadget.let take an example, technology company like google are willing to pay an enermous wages for highly gifted person who competent in technology. Thus, by introducing technology earlier for childern, it should be worthy to compete and increase possibility to achieve higher revenue in the future.  
  
In addition, live in the future would much more depend on technology. A plenty people are optimistic that childern in the sequel would be able to cope a lot of problem with technology. For example, currently, many expert have no idea to teckle many disaster.Future prediction, many inhabitans have a huge expectation that this problem would be demolished by people who competent with it. It reveals kids should be cogitate about it at the beginning of their ages.  
  
To conclude, children are more worhty by familiarize them how to operate all of gadgets more beneficial, pouring assume that they should be able to settle down significant problem with technology in the future.
## Economic inequality among people

  
  
Nowadays, an increasing of people are concerned about the gap between the upper and lower class in terms of economic inequality. This phenomenon is clearly able to lead to negative effects on society, thus, it is necessary to find out efficient ways to tackle them.  
  
It is obvious that the difference between the wealthy and less wealthy citizens has given rise to the serious problem for not only individuals but also entire society. Firstly, the stability of community could be affected negatively due to many people, especially the poor may commit a crime because of an increasing of unemployment rates. Not to mention that these unsafe societies might fall into economic crisis, as a result of a low economic growth. As many the poor as many conflicts and violence in the daily life. This prevents the development of the economy, which is the main key to contributing to the good welfare and public services. Besides, individuals who have the life below the standard of living have no opportunity to live a decent life. Hardly has anyone without knowledge and skills could have a well-paid job so these people could not get access to high-quality education or good health services. This brings about the fact that the poor fall into the circle of poverty.  
  
To bridge the gap between the rich people and the poor citizen, the government should enact a range of efficient policies which enhance the living standard of the latter. One of the effective ways is that imposing more taxes on the rich and invest these budgets in public services such as healthcare, social security or pension, etc. These state's subsidies provide people with low income a chance to get access the basic requirements of life. In addition, the authority's top priority should be education. More people at school, less unemployment in the society. All people will be offered the equality to develop themselves and have a better life.  
  
In conclusion, there are so many worst problems caused by the wealth disparity. To deal with this issue, local authority needs to have a special care about education to improve the quality of workers. It is not to say that the poor should be work hard and study harder to become more competitive in the job market.
**It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.  
  
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?**  
  
## learning kids by force

  
  
Teaching children is one of the hardest tasks that parents have to do. Beside a lot of effective methods, punishment is considered as an effective way to guide children learn right from wrong. However, in my opinion, punishment is a bad form of educating children because of some main reasons.  
  
To begin with, parents cannot gain the desired results by using punishment as an educating method. It is easily seen that criticizing or yelling only can make children on fear and tend to oppose their parents. A survey conducted in 2015 in Vietnam showed that children who are punished, often commit more mistakes. Instead of admitting their own mistakes, they are willing to hide their faults, shift the blame on someone and worse, tell a lie to avoid being punished by parents.Obviously, in these cases, children cannot become a well- behaved and respectful individuals just by parent's punishment.  
  
Another reason should be mentioned is that punishment is likely to erode the parent- chid relationship. For example, after being scolded, children are full of frightened and disappointed. Moreover, they also feel disconnected and hate their parents. Consequence, the child will defend and not want to share anything with others who always criticize and punish him or her. Thus, the further distance the child has with parents, the more difficultly they educate him.  
  
The last reason is punishment clearly has a huge long-term negative effects on the child's behaviour. Parents who always come down on their child, set a bad example for the child to copy and imitate. As a results, the child might behave like their parents such as losing control, easily being angry and aggressive whenever he does not satisfied with others. Ultimately, he will be leaded to violence when he is teenager and adult.  
  
In conclusion, punishment is the worst method of educating children and parents should not use or abuse punishment to help children develop. By doing this, they will give the correct direct in raising process and gain the expectations of their own children.
Hello mail257, thanks for your feedback on my essay.  
  
With regard to yours, I believe you have good insights and arguments within the essay. However, I think you should pay additional attention to grammar.  
  
Here are some of the suggestions and corrections of mine:  
  
1. Aside from the various effective methods  
2. can only make children fear and oppose  
3. full of fright and disappointment /or/ frightened and disappointed  
4. Consequently,  
5. the more difficult it is to educate him/them  
6. As a result,  
7. he is not satisfied.  
  
Best of luck!
**The chart shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries**  
  
## life outside the homeland

  
  
The bar chart reveals about cases of people have when they migrate to live in other countries. Overall, sorting out healthcare which people aged between 35 to 54 face became the highest problem meanwhile elderly people experienced the lowest problem on finding school for my children.  
  
To begin with, sorting out healthcare of people aged 35-54 remotesa significant increase at approximately 36 percent. Additionally, people aged 18-34 encounters 30% of problem on sorting out finance. Furthermore, both of theseare the greatest problems. On the other hand, finding school for my children is the lowest problem for people aged over 55 or elderly people at approximately 20% and saw an extreme decrease in nearly 3 per cent.  
  
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*task 1*
let me give you some suggestions,  
  
This is a very stresful two weeks.  
please notice that stressful is an adjective then it cannot become a head of noun phrase and pay more attention on your spelling. You also may need a separation between stressful and two weeks (such giving "of")  
  
There are different ~~schedule~~ between the new ...  
please notify more on your subject verb agreement.  
  
hope this helps,  
keep cheers,  
  
many thanks,
## museums and artworks importance

  
  
Museums and various artworks are one of the most valuable assets of a country. Because of this, I strongly agree that their value for the nation, for the history, and culture must be emphasized in the locality and in the global setting.  
  
One of the vital contributions of museums and artworks for the country is to establish economical stability. With the income generated from the admission fees in the museums along with the profits obtained from the souvenir artwork items, a significant enhancement in the economic state of a country will be evident. For example, the tax attained from the the museums can be utilized to enhance the public services offered for the community and will also have a huge impact in the economic standing of a nation. In addition, museums and diferent artworks provide employment for the country. With the prevalence of museums, an increase in manpower hiring will also be prominent. As a result, more job opportunities will be available especially for the local community, thus contributing to the overall development of a country.  
  
Furthermore, museums and artworks have a substantial part in preserving the history and culture of a country. With the prevalence of technological advancement these days, the younger generations are often unaware of the history and culture of their own nation. However, with the availability of these museums and artworks, the youth can certainly contemplate on their distinct culture and traditions. Another importance of artworks is its representation for the country. It is without a doubt that each country has its own valued artworks. Therefore, with these artwork materials, the country will be able to share and showcase their culture and history for the whole world to witness.  
  
To conclude, museums and artworks play a significant role in the development of the society and the country. Therefore, I strongly believe that these treasured aspects of the nation should be preserved and promoted in the entire globe.  
  
DEXTER REPUYAN
## Cheap air travel should be encouraged?

  
  
*Many people think cheap air travel should be encouraged because it gives ordinary people freedom to travel further. However, others think this leads to environmental problems, so air travel should be more expensive in order to discourage people from having it. Discuss the both sides and give your own opinion.*  
  
ESSAY:  
Nowadays,more and more cheap air travel company come into our sight.Some people think that cheap airline tickets could give ordinary people chances to travel around the world,so it should be encouraged.Others think that cheap air travel is not environmental friendly,so the price of it should be more expensive to prevent the environment .As far as I'm concerned, cheaper price could benefit us,but we should cut down unneeded trip to reduce the chance of air pollution.  
  
We believe that cheap air travel helps us to be more familiar to the world and enjoy our lives .For example,instead of traveling in their homelands,people trend to choose to go abroad to entertain themselves during a short five or six days' holiday because of the international airline's lower price.And during their trips,they will come across diverse cultures,languages,foods and so on.On the one hand, it could improve international communication and so increase culture's merge.On the other hand,people will consume more money in their travels, so that it could stimulate economic growth and even speed up globalization.But if there was no cheap tickets,all things above would not happened.  
  
On the meanwhile,cheap air travel also has some disadvantages.For instance,it may cause more air pollution and waste of fossil fuel for the reason that more and more people will choose to take flight to their destinations,rather taking trains or buses,because taking air plane is cheap ,quick and safe.The higher price could reduce people's willing to travel some far distances.What's more, if we reduce the number of cheaper airline tickets,more people would change to other public transportation facilities,which could reduce the waste of resources and decrease carbon emission.  
  
In my opinion,cheap air travel does more good than harm, and rising up prices is not the only way to protect the earth.There are more wise ways to solve this problem.The government should develop convenient public transportation system and reduce the price of trains and buses to encourage people live a low-carbon lives.Furthermore,we can choose our lifestyles freely,but we need to take environment protection in our minds.
## carbohydrates provides energy

  
  
All the energy and nutrients that enable us to live and do exercise come from the food and drink we consume daily.Among all the nutrients we intake, carbohydrate is probably the fundamental and most efficient energy source that drive our body work.When people are doing exercise, they always feel energetic at the beginning and exhausted in the end.What make such a huge differences?Hence, this essay will mainly focus on how carbs facilitate people performing exercises.   
  
Understanding how carbs aid our performance, it is important to note that there are three forms of carbohydrates, namely monosaccharide, disaccharide and polysaccharide beforehand.Once eaten, no matter what form the carbs is, it will break down into a monosaccharide called glucose.Any glucose that has immediate usage will proceed into respiration, a catabolic reaction that breaks down glucose into pyruvate, NADH and FADH and ultimately, convert all the subunits into ATP, an energy currency that allows skeleton muscle cells to obtain energy for running or jumping.For those without instant demand, they will go through an anabolic reaction that converts into glycogen by condensation of several monosaccharides.A human can store around 445 grams of glycogen in total.They act as an energy reservoir that deposit in different muscle cells and liver as well.During slow and long duration exercise like marathon, those stored glycogen provide energy at a slower rate by respiration as well.As a result, the more you stored inside, the later you 'hit the wall', a term uses when all the carbs inside are out of supply.  
  
However, the demand for carbs not only confined to our physical strength but also the mental strength.Neurones are the basic unit in our nervous system and since carbohydrate is the only energy source for neurones, the brain take in glucose as a nutrient to produce energy in the same way as muscle cells, so that we can make decisions and maintain consciousness during exercise.Besides, the synthesis of acetylcholine, one of the neurotransmitter, require glucose as well.Having more glucose will facilitate the formation of acetylcholine by Choline and acetyl-coenzymeA.They act at neuromuscular junction by transmitting nerve impulses to muscle for contraction.  
  
To sum up, carbohydrate is vital in the sense that it generate energy to support the proper functioning of our whole body.Different form of carbohydrates plays different role in our body by different metabolic reactions.Do not be afraid of carbohydrates.It will benefit your performance somehow.