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in six continents of the world  
Enumerate the continents. Additionally, this should be presented as the second summary overview sentence.  
  
Asian areas  
There are 2 areas cited.These need to be identified individually for accuracy purposes in the trending statement.  
  
To be more specific  
Why the over emphasis?This is unnecessary since you are doing a general rather than a focused report. Using that phrase does not imply analysis, just a focus on a topic. It is not needed in a task 1 essay.  
  
You have the potential to score well in this essay. Just remember that you need to provide specific data at the start and offer comparative analysis accurately throughout. More practice is required. This presentation is a good enough start.
*Question:  
## Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.

  
**To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?***  
  
It is argued that government should invest more money on the railway system instead of roads. From my point of view, I strongly agree with this idea because railways bring enormous benefits to our lives.  
  
To begin with, the development of the railroad system will facilitate long distance travel and the transportation of bulk goods with speed and certainty. Railways can be seen as one of the fastest modes of transport second only to airways. Trains can reach a speed of more than 300 km/h and they have an extremely large carrying capacity compared to other vehicles such as cars, motorbikes or airplanes. Therefore, railway transport is the perfect choice for traffic, especially long distance travel with heavy loads of goods.  
  
In addition, the railway network also makes a great contribution to the protection of the environment. We know that CO2 emissions from vehicles are the primary driver of global climate change and air pollution. Hence, improving rail routes is an effective way to encourage public switching from private vehicles to more eco-friendly ones like trains or trams. The more people travel by railways, the less toxic gases are generated and emitted to our environment.  
  
In conclusion, government should consider spending more money on developing the railway network than constructing roads. Railway is not only an effective solution for environmental problems but it also makes our traveling activities easier and more convenient.  
  
*Please leave some feedback on my essay. Many thanks*
Excellent restatement and an equally admirable thesis response. This is a strong response foundation and the TA score will reflect that. I have to admit that even the reasoning paragraphs are well thought out. The writer clearly understood the topic and discussion format requirements. The ideas presented are clear and tremendously relevant to the essay. This piece of writing shows that the writer has the potential to score as high as an 8 or 9. The writer has that ability, but it was underutilized in this presentation.  
  
The writer has only 232 words in this presentation. Not writing 250 words, the writer forced score markdown based on wordcount instead. Further explanation development in every paragraph would have prevented that. Instead of a passing score, the writer may fail instead.
## Australian household energy use and the greenhouse gas emissions

  
  
An average of using energy in some terms of Australian families is showed in the first pie chart, followed by the proportion of the greenhouse gas emissions as a result in the rest chart.  
  
It is noticeable that heating and water heating are two types having the most using. However, only water heating makes up the highest proportion of gas emission and the second is other appliances.  
  
Australian use 40% of energy in heating and 30% in water heating. While the percentage of lighting and cooling just stand at below 5%, the figure of other appliances is higher at 15%.  
  
Even though energy use of warming is the highest, its emissions is far less likely about two times. Exhausting produced by cooling and water heating conduct approximately similar number of using stamina. Figure for others release more than twice consumption, followed by lighting at 8%, refrigeration at 15% and alternative appliances at 28%  
  
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When you wite a trending statement for 2 images, remember to identify the image type along with the thend for differentiation purposes. since the images carry similar information listings, the reader must be clued in on the location and relationship of the trend. The trending statement is a large part of the accuracy score so you have to do well in that portion in as much as it relates to the summary overview.  
  
The first image analysis is incomplete. You did not compare your written data with the image content. This image provides enough content for at least 3 more reference sentences. The second image is better represented and more accurate in terms of discussion. Never forget to connect the data with the image anchor. The essay you wrote is really confusing to read due to the lack of image guide / reference.
## TASK 2 IELTS WRITING: Positive or negative trend?

  
  
***Question:** In some cities, the government has tried to reduce traffic by imposing congestion tax during rush hours. Is this positive or negative?*  
  
Congestion pricing has been applied in a number of countries as a solution to heavy traffic in this day and age. While many maintain that it brings certain benefits, I believe that this is a negative development since it cannot fully tackle the traffic crisis and arouse deep discontent among the masses towards the government.  
  
The main reason why I suppose this trend is unfavorable is because congestion tax alone is unlikely to thoroughly resolve the traffic problem. To elaborate, it does not reduce the people's legitimate need to travel at peak hours, thereby people remain driving on roads although they are taxed. Hence, this tax measure is considered to be costly and meaningless for both commuters and governments as it does not reach its primary goal to reduce the number of vehicles available in multiple cities.  
  
Moreover, congestion tax would cause people's fierce discontent against their authority. This is because it puts low-income drivers under financial pressure when they have to pay a very regular amount of money each day just for movement while there are other living expenses that are more essential for them to deal with. As a result, people would question the practicality and effectiveness of this promised solution for traffic overload - congestion tax, and whether it is a disguised profiteering behavior of state officials. Once people feel their rights are threatened, they would develop hatred towards their government and stand up against it, leading to uncontrollable chaos in the community.  
  
In short, I firmly believe this is a negative trend due to its ineffectiveness in reducing traffic as well as increasing discontent in the community. Given this situation, the government should apply more optimal measures such as investing in upgrading public transportation and investing in building bridges.  
  
Note: Please check this for me. I really appreciate that.
in this day and age.  
There is no need to add this memorized please to the sentence. It makes the sentence definitely sound ESL and kind of weakens the grammar range in terms of sentence structure and writing control. Avoid memorized please use in your essays going forward. Those are definitely score lowering references.  
  
suppose  
You cannot suppose. When you suppose, you ask the reader to consider (something) as a possibility suggested or an idea or plan proposed. while you might refer to this as a point of arguement, the score you recieve in a task 2 essay is based on the validity and clarity of your opinion. The use of this word instead indicates uncertainty thus negating your originally stated opinion.  
  
Given this situation, the government should apply more optimal measures  
The instruction does not include the presentation of a possible solution. Adding unnecessary discussion points, specially in the concluding summary will cause additional deductions to the score. By the way, you forgot to include the topic replacement before the reasoning summary.
## table tennis match at Tokyo 2020 Olympic

  
  
I'd like to talk about the most exciting table tennis match I've seen with the two players I like most. In the semi-final at the Tokyo 2020 Olympic women's singles table tennis event Ito Mina, the Japanese prodigy who met Sun Ying Sha - her Chinese opponent. Sun Ying Sha is considered the symbol of a new generation of Chinese table tennis when she was only 21 years old, was already one of the top tennis players in the world, especially in her form, is very impressive, not out of shape during the past 2 years.  
  
When the match started, Ito Mima couldn't keep her cool "needless" style when she faced Chinese players anymore, she was very impatient to win instead. The inability to control herself makes her balls often miss the target, consequently, she lost the first set. Notwithstanding then, there was a dramatic turnaround. She suddenly to find some self-belief and made the opponent under huge pressure by leading deep in the second. Nevertheless, Sun Ying Sha with her youth and thorough preparation in terms of tactics has handled very well the spikes of the ball of the opponent and was ready to change the drop point in her balls to create surprise and win convincingly with a score of 9-11. Ito Mina was expected to overthrow the dominance of Chinese women's table tennis at the Olympics. But with the first time participating in the Olympics in women's singles and the pressure of the host country to win, the expectations of the fans, Mina competed under her strength. Ito Mima is not confident enough to show an inherently diverse playstyle. She accepted defeat with a score of 0-4 and will focus on the goal of winning the bronze medal.  
  
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## the choice of most suitable job

  
  
A suitable career plays a significant role in one's life. Many people believe that when selecting a job, the most vital aspect that should be concerned is the payment. To the best of my knowledge, I partly agree with this point of view because whether the job helps people to improve or not is also considerable.  
  
On the one hand, it is true that a well-paid job brings about many advantages. Obviously, without money, people cannot meet their basic needs. For example, everyone needs money to pay for housing, bills, education, health care, transportation fares and so on. Therefore, people tend to prioritize a job with high salary which not only covers their demand but also enables them to raise living standard easily. If people choose their jobs based on enjoyment or other non-financial factors, they might find it difficult to support themselves. For instance, artists and musicians, who are known for pursuing their loves, do not always have abilities to live comfortably and raise a family.  
  
On the other hand, what position of employment gives should be taken into consideration as one of the most primary features in making a job decision. Personal relationships and working environment are extremely important. Having good employers and high-qualified colleagues can make a difference to workers' levels of happiness and general quality of life. According to many experts, working condition is a huge motivation that makes people try harder and devote to their job. Moreover, many people's feelings of job satisfaction come from their professional achievements, the skills they learn, and the position they reach, rather than the money they earn.  
  
To sum up, I agree that people should select a job having a wage that is enough for their livings. However, people also ought to consider if the job helps them to widen their knowledge, gain more experiences, and reach great achievement. When people can balance between salary and what they receive, they will able to choose to most suitable job, which opens up their opportunities of success.
The reasoning discussion of the writer mistakenly uses a comparative format. The examiner does not need to know about the advantages of the discussion. The 2 paragraphs should focus only on explaining the partial agreement based on   
  
the job helps people to improve or not is also considerable  
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Since only one paragraph supports this opinion, a baseline passing score may be awarded based on discussion relevance and limited errors in other scoring sections. It is difficult to say with certainty that the response can get a passing score since the supporting paragraph lacks a backup supporting statement. It is underdeveloped based on reasoning requirements.  
  
My opinion is provided without knowing if your response is relevant to the task or not. You did not provide the original prompt for my guidance. The review provided is based on a general observation alone.
## Sports in schools for children

  
  
It is thought that sport plays a more important role in the educational environment, whereas, there is some claim that sport should not be a compulsory subject. I agree with the latter statement and the following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument.  
  
To begin with, by playing a kind of sport, student's time would be more efficient. This leads to getting higher levels of learning results and grades. For example. Our brains are boosted while exercising, which might be helpful for long-term memories. Furthermore, participating in physical activities might prevent depression that most youngsters get from toxic social media. It is clear that considering sport as a compulsory subject is essential.  
  
However, this line of reasoning is not sound because it wastes time doing sport as time might be more efficient in academic performance. Instead of joining in these un-worth activities, students would invest in practicing or studying, and then achieve better learning prospects that all of the students aim to. One of my classmates is a practical example. Although he plays football well, he achieves lower test scores than his peers because of not having enough time for education then neglecting his studies. In addition, physical exercise in educational programs has some strenuous exercises that are not suitable for those who have weak health. it is undeniable that sport should be remarked as a compulsory subject in education.  
  
In short, although playing sport is a benefit for the mental as well as the physical development, I would argue that it is better if students are taught how to manage time, avoiding neglecting their academic
The writer shall only recieve a score for the personal opinion statement The essay is going to be considered for a failing score due to the lack of public opinion explanation and consideration. The essay does not have any seperation references that indicate the public opinion discussion as opposed to the personal opinion. something that is accomplished through the use of third person pronouns (as representative of the public opinion) and first person references ( for the personal opinion).  
  
Always refer to the discussion format requirement Review the essay after drafting it. Make sure that you clearly seperate the opinions as required. This is the only essay type that will ask you to compare 3 opinions instead of only 1 as usually indicated by the prompts.
**Topic:  
*Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.*  
## Discuss both views and state your opinion**  
  
While some agreed that an international event brings plenty of advantages to its host country, others believe this has the disadvantage. In my opinion, I consider both arguments have their merits, however despite the drawback, it is still much beneficial to the country of such event.  
  
First, a sport event is considered a tool used for supporting the economic development of a country. This means that the country can utilize an event for encouraging more spending, which enhances the economic consumer price index (CPI). For example, the events such as the World cup and Olympics are competitively fought for the right of hosting among countries, since these can bring billions of dollars to the country by attracting tourists across the world to travel in and spend a huge amount of money for various types of service.  
  
On the other hand, it is evident that an event can also create detrimental effects on the country. In fact, there are obvious risks caused by the event which could threaten the health system of the country. For instance, in the Covid pandemic, the communicable disease seems hard to be prevented from infection, especially in a sport event where a lot of people carrying disease from different regions gather in the same place. In this situation, the country needs to put a lot of effort to avoid from badly impacted by the event.  
  
In conclusion, although the negative impacts might happen due to the event, I still believe that hosting a sport brings many benefits far more than the disadvantage
Note the opinion basis as provided. One opinion is represented as,   
  
Some people  
. While the other side considers,   
  
while some people  
. This represents the need for a third person discussion consideration twice in the essay. That means, both points of view cannot be presented solely on the writer's opinion as you do now.  
  
Consider each good reason for the public opinion, discuss.Then consider if you agree or disagree with the opinion and add it to the presentation. Try to successfully explain why you oppose or support it. Make sure the correct pronouns are used to represent the discussion. At this point, only the writers general opinion is present. This will recieve a score but, due to the inaccurate format, cannot recieve full marks in the TA section.
***The tendency of human beings copy another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods.***  
To whar extend do you agree or disagree?  
  
The popularity of areas including fashion and consumer goods evidence an instinct of human beings of imitating others. While people who oppose this seize on reasons like developed marketing techniques and mass production, I contend this is widely true regarding people's fundamental needs of being appreciated and accepted.  
  
Some people believe that it is companies' enhanced and diverse marketing techniques, as well as huge production quantity that causes the spread of fashion trends and goods, not people's tendency of copying. They think that companies have taken advantage of the popularity of the mass media and the influence of famous individuals to convince customers to buy their products. To illustrate, smartphones, when coming to the market, are often advertised by a wide range of methods including advertisements on televisions, on social media, or through recommendations of influencers or reviewers on Youtube. Additionally, because of the mass production, many people coincidently buy similar products and this coincidently ends up like they were imitating the others.  
  
However, I take the view that people buy the same things as others because they want to satisfy their instinct of being appreciated and accepted. The reason why this is especially visible in areas such as fashion and goods is that these two fields are the easiest ways for human beings to imitate others and to be regarded. People often form their initial impression and the foremost judgment of others based on their looks, and they often are more friendly and cooperative when encountering people that are "the same" as them. Therefore, human beings tend to wear what people around them wear. Teenagers wear jeans, hoodies, or several "weird" fashion styles mostly because their friends do the same things, and having similar fashion tastes lets them be more recognized by their peers.  
  
In conclusion, although some people think the spread of fashion and goods is the result of effective use of the media and mass manufacture, I contend that this phenomenon represents an instinct of being a part of a tribe that is rooted in human beings. Moreover, people should be aware of the impact of this instinct when purchasing to avoid financial waste.  
  
*Thank you so much for spending time reading and revising my essay!*
While people who oppose this  
Where did you get this idea? It is not a part of the original prompt reference. This makes your statement inaccurate enough to recieve a significant accuracy markdown. Do not add topics to the original statement.  
  
I contend this is widely true  
Good answer. Wrong response format. Where is the measured and emotional response as required by the extent question? This is going to ensure that the essay immediately fails half the scoring requirements.  
  
It is quite unfortunate that you misunderstood the discussion question and response format requirements. You truly have a good control of sentence structure and your discussions are logical on a simple basis. However, the misrepresented discussion angle is what prevents this from becoming a passing score essay. Better familiarity with various response formats should help you avoid the same error in the future.
## car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005

  
  
The line gragh shows the figures for the number of UK commuters who own one or more cars over the period of 30 years.  
It is clear that the owner of one car made up the greatest level, whereas the number of people who got for their own three cars comprised a negligible point over the period shown.  
  
In the year 1975, about 43 percent of people in the UK did not own any car, at the same percentage was the number of one - car owner with 45 percent. Also in that year, the percentage of people who had two cars and three cars was quite small, 7 percent and 3 percent respectively. However, the year 1985 saw a drammatical decline in the firgure for people who had no car or one car only. In contrast, the one who got two cars or three cars rose slightly in the number.  
  
From 1985 to 2005, there was a gradual fall in the percentage of commuters who did not buy themselves a car to 22 percent, while the percentage people own one car increased again to 45 percent. This period also witnessed a moderate growth in the number of UK owner of two cars and three cars.
over the period of 30 years.  
Seeing as how this is the summary overviews you cannot use other year measurement references yet. If you mustuse other year measurements, never forget to indicate the actual years covered otherwise, the summary is incomplete in terms of accurate data presentation and could recieve a reduced sectional score.  
  
the owner of one car  
The phrase is inaccurate in the sense that it is in singular form when the image provides a plural measurement for "single car owners". This is a sentence formation problem.  
  
there was a gradual fall in the percentage  
You have to present the starting percentage to help the reader understand the fall rate and final figure.  
  
witnessed a moderate growth  
Of what percentage?  
  
Basically, the writer needs to work on accurate data presentation in relation to report clarity. There are also several spelling evors that show a lack of editing and proofreading.The essay will fail based an LR and GRA errors.