Smally, the first thing I want you to do is to stop agreeing with all the errors that are pointed out in your writing. Acknowledge the mistakes internally and try to stop making the same mistakes over and over again in your succeeding essays. The best way to acknowledge the advice is to have you show improvement in your writing. You do that by applying the corrections that are given to you. I hope I have myself clear about this. Acknowledging your mistakes, but then repeating the same errors, as you did in this essay, does nothing to help improve your writing skills.  
  
Now, I am sure that I have already advised you that not all task 2 essays are arguments. In order to figure out what discussion reference to use, look for the keyword in the essay. For this essay, the keyword is "believe". So you cannot say "argue" since there is no debate being referenced in the original discussion. Rather than "argue" you could say "Some people think that...". Think then takes the place of "believe as a keyword. It is still related to the original prompt keyword.  
  
With regards to your sentences per paragraph. Try to create connected sentences rather than extremely long sentences that try to connect 2 different thoughts into one sentence presentation. Use transitional phrases or sentences to connect the sentences and paragraphs. You are lowering your GRA scoring potential by using only 2 long sentences per paragraph when the requirement is 3-5 sentences per paragraph. Your opening paraphrase is severely lacking in the context of the original reference. A better presentation is:  
  
*There are folks who think that teachers play a critical role in the education of a child. Others have the impression that it is the student who should be self inspired to achieve academic accomplishments. I will be considering both points of view in this essay in relation to my personal opinion.*  
  
Finally, you need to work on your vocabulary in relation to your sentence structure. There are two glaring errors in your presentation that I cannot omit mentioning in my review. The first has to do with the following:  
  
The good teacher must be the good student to himself,  
- I am sure this makes sense in your native language but the way you have this sentence structured in English doesn't make sense. What is the point of this phrase? What are you referring to? How you refer to the subject of the sentence is just as important as the subject itself. Without that clarity, the sentence becomes really confusing to the reader.  
  
to determine the success of failure of an education. S  
- This is grammatically wrong. You are offering the reader a choice in this sentence so the proper structure is "success OR failure of ..." Or being the keyword in a sentence offering the reader a choice.  
  
Now, I do not want you to say "I agree that..." in a response statement coming from you. That is tantamount to constantly apologizing for yourself and you have to stop with that defeatist attitude. It will not help you get any better with your writing skills. Just show me that you will not make the same mistakes in your future work. That is the best acknowledgement of mistakes and appreciation for the advice given that I and the others who will be advising you in this thread can receive from you :-)