While you did write more than the minimum required word count, you did not follow the discussion format as required. As such, the essay has not provided an appropriate response to the direct question being asked. The question was:  
  
T*o what extent do you agree or disagree?*  
  
You responded:  
  
*In reality, more vehicle will increase environmental health hazards on human beings.*  
  
You placed your extent response at the end of the essay instead:  
  
*I tend to strongly support government initiative*  
  
It is clear from the way that you formatted your response that you had no idea as to how to properly discuss this essay based on the given instruction. You failed to create a proper concluding summary and you failed to create a proper prompt restatement. Both formatting errors, plus several other presentation errors will result in a failing score for this essay.  
  
The question is asked at the beginning. The reason you have to give your direct response at the end of the prompt restatement is because you are being a chance to properly outline your discussion paragraphs in the presentation. An example response:  
  
**(Students are not allowed to offer their own response examples as student advice and examples tend to be incorrect. The response examples are for contributors only to offer.)**  
  
*Modern families tend to own more than one automobile per family. This multiple vehicle proprietorship is believed to be one reason for street gridlocks. As such, a proposal has been made to limit the ownership of sedans to only one per household. I strongly support this idea due to two main reasons.*  
  
Do not exaggerate your restatement. Stick to the given information. Focus on synonym usage. Indicate the number of reasons or the reasons itself in the last sentence. Complete the summary presentation and outline of the discussion.  
  
Your current discussion is not aligned with the requirements of the discussion. The discussion responses should be related to the strength of your belief in your response to the question. The government has nothing to do with the discussion so they should never be included in the presentation. You may use personal knowledge, commonly known information, or personal experience as the basis for your discussion reasons. Stick only with the facts presented in the original discussion.  
  
This is not a comparative discussion. Only 2 reasons that explain your support for a particular point of view must be presented. Discuss comparative reasons only in A/.D and C/C essays. Opinion essays, such as this one, which have direct questions requiring straight responses do not use multiple angle discussion points.  
  
The concluding summary, as the phrase suggests, should allow you to repeat the previous information in a new manner. It must show the examiner that you are capable of saying the same information in at least 2 different ways, that still keeps the essence of the discussion intact. That is why you cannot offer the strength of your opinion in the summary conclusion. That creates an open ended essay, which will result in a low score for you because you failed to close the essay using the expected format.  
  
At this point, I will not delve into the other errors of your essay. Your presentation was wrong to begin with, so giving you advice based on a wrong presentation will not be helpful to you.