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1. *The line graph shows the amount ... Overall, the two graphs ...*( i think that this meaning different from the original state, pay attention with your pharaprase and in overview you should put the interesting one phenomenon)  
  
2. The first line graph informs about the money which has given by the ... ( try to review again i think that this sentence confusing)  
The extremely >>>( increase extremely ) increase (which one increasing ???) by 15 thousand (...) to third year (s+v agreemen). The graph not only always increase in each year, but also decrease in fourth year at 35 thousand pounds. the graph not only increase, but also (s+v)......
The one method to keep the English-speaking public's mood and preoccupations that are the selection of the word by Oxford's editors. The reason of to create this concept is increasing of social media and self-belief on our self that precise purpose to improve language skill, mainly in English word, has been discovering the linguistic footing for some time. The list of the word is adulting, alt-right, brexiteer, chatbot, coulrophobia, glass cliff, hygge, latinx, and woke.  
  
Source : time
**again, it is hard to understand what you meant, not only because a severe problem in grammatical accuracy but also because the word chosen and the way you compose your sentences. mostly, those are not make a sense. I have reminded you many times that you should understand first what you read, grasp the main ideas there and write it down using new vocabulary since the next step is paraphrasing. without clear and sufficient understanding, you will not be able to compose a proper summary.**  
  
make sure that you attached the complete link of the sourceso that people who want to give you feedback can easily read the article and compare it with yours, or in any case like mine, unable to comprehend your writing, they can check it to give you more valuable suggestion and correction  
  
~~The one~~ A method / ONE OF METHODS to keep the (...) and preoccupations ~~that are the selection of~~ IS THROUGH Oxford's editors WHO SELECT the word ~~by Oxford's editors.~~  
  
The reason of to create this concept is increasing ..... the linguistic footing for some time.  
**COMPLETELY LOST IN THIS SENTENCE**  
  
The reason of ~~to create~~ CREATING this concept / THE CONCEPT CREATING is FOR increasing*of social media and self-belief on our self that precise purpose to improve language skill, mainly in English word, has been discovering the linguistic footing for some time.***I CANNOT GIVE ANY CORRECTION EITHER ALTERNATIVES FOR THIS SINCE I REALLY DO NOT UNDERSTAND WHAT YOU WANT TO DELIVER HERE**  
  
WHAT INCLUDED ON The list of the word ~~IS~~ ARE adulting, alt-right, ...
First of all, about topic sentence. You should identifies the title, author, and speaker of the original material. Such as, "a TEDers, talking about The Launching of 'Post-Truth' Concept in Oxford's Word of the Year for 2016". And the second is supporting sentences, you should follow the same order as original if possible. Furthermore, it is better for you to be objective. Last but not least, You cannot use your opinion and you should mention in general as in the original video.
Anopheles is one of the most dangerous mosquitoes in the world. Recently, scientist discovered weapon to exterminate or eradicated it. They called ivermectin. It can't immediately protect human from bite anopheles but it can killing easily after that. Therefore, the researchers are trying to give ivermectin to most of people in an area, particularly which had several case area. It can seriously impact to anopheles and making inhibitans safe from malaria.
Alfin, when you describe Ivermectin, you need to capitalize it as it is a proper noun because the name describes a chemical name. You should also indicate in the summary that Ivermectin is a chemical because the reader needs to know how it is administered to the user. By the way, how is it administered? You forgot to include that explanation in the summary.  
  
Additionally, you should have made mention of the areas where the chemical is being introduced for use. The places are indicated in the report and will help show a more authoritative tone for your summary. Before I forget, you should have included an explanation as to the method of administration of the chemical, how long it takes to take effect, and how long it can protect humans from the mosquito.  
  
Basically, you need to add more information from the article in order to deliver a more informative summary of the article. Right now, the essay leaves the reader with more questions than information.
Hi alfinkurnia, let me say some words  
  
1. ... to exterminate or ~~eradicated~~eradicate it  
  
2. ... it can ~~killing~~kill easily after that ...  
After modal is infinitive, killing is noun and you need to replace to kill  
  
3. ... to anopheles and ~~making~~make~~inhibitans~~inhabitants safe from malaria  
You need a verb, so change making to make  
  
Thank you  
Keep writing
Question  
**Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.  
Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?**  
  
Observe television programs and movies to learn about the others countries in overseas are better than directly visit. I tremendously disagree with the statement that people have better understanding about worldwide countries only by watching programs and films.  
  
People can answer their curiosity is one of the benefits they can get from observe television programs or films about a country in the world. Not only they can study about common information about the nation, but also they can know more about the building structure, inhabitants and others essential information. For illustrate, from my own experience, I can found a new facts about the environment particularly American inhabitants, they are consist of large number of culture, religions and region states. Moreover, I also can broaden my knowledge about wildlife in Africa when I saw National Geographic program in television.  
  
Although the viewer able to expand their knowledge from television and movies, they also only know small portion of factual information about the country. Furthermore, viewers only know the information is offered by media and not the real conditions such their upward aspects in economic. That's the background why visiting is the better way to know about any aspect of the country. When we visit directly to a country, we can face the real condition of the social atmosphere in there. In addition, we can learn about their lifestyle, habits and prosperity of local inhabitants which not expose by television program and movies. For example, when I was visited German few years ago, I felt cultural shock because the citizens in there are very discipline and obey any rules in their country rather than our people.  
  
All in all, directly visit to other country are better way than observe television programs. Personally, for some condition, we can still expand our knowledge not only by watching television programs and directly visit the country, but also we can read several books and search on the internet.
HALLO DIOBA.. here i try to give you some suggestions.. i hope it helps!  
  
YOUR QUESTION  
  
Some people say that you can ...  
  
YOUR ANSWER  
  
Observe television programs and movies...  
  
**MY COMMENTS  
  
1. PARAPHRASE THE QUESTION SUCCESSFULLY  
2. HAVE NOT ANSWER HOW TRUE THE STATEMENT. YOU MUST ANSWER THAT QUESTION WITH "THIS IS TRUE" OR THE OPPOSITE  
3. IT IS NOT AGREE AND DISAGREE QUESTION  
4. YOU HAVE NOT ANSWER ABOUT THE NEXT QUESTION " IS THERE ANYTHING YOU LEARN.."  
5. YOU DID NOT EXPLAIN YOUR REASON.. ACTUALLY YOU MUST PUT YOUR BRIEF REASON IN YOUR INTRODUCTION  
  
BE CAREFUL BECAUSE INTRODUCTION IS THE MOST IMPORTANT AND THE BASE IDEA FOR YOUR BODY PARAGRAPH..  
  
KEEP WRITING AND GOOD LUCK !**
Hello, Alfin.  
  
*In my opinion, you should put more detailed information related to "How America public schools keep kids in poverty" in order to provide sufficient understanding for readers. I do not get favorable comparison between education for the rich and the poor.*  
  
Here are some additional suggestions for you.  
  
Nowadays, most of people (...) can get good education in school.  
They register to excellent~~school~~institutions with exclusive ~~facility~~facilities .  
  
*[It is essential to ensure that each sentence has a complete structure. That's way, I suggest you to split your sentence since the word "registered" does not its own subject.]*  
  
On other hand, the ~~poverty~~poor people (...), and ~~more~~most choose ~~for~~to work.  
*[It does not make a sense to put two noun respectively, in exception with certain words.]*  
  
This is because they (...) need help ~~and they must work~~ .  
*[Repetition]*  
  
... have good ~~facilty is~~facilities are not free~~,~~.  
Thus,~~the~~students who want to study at school must pay ~~enough expensive~~high tuition fee and ~~its~~it is certainly not reasonable for poor family.
Hi, Iet me give comments  
  
1. ... can get good education in school~~,~~and~~registered~~register to excelent school ...  
Seeing that there are only 2 instances, you should use 'and' between those ideas.  
  
2. the poverty people decide~~d~~ to drop out from school, and more choose ~~for~~to work because ...  
  
3. Some spelling errors  
excelent ----> excellent  
facilty ----> facility  
  
Good luck,  
Keep writing
Facebook, one of the most enormous company was surprised people in the world. Because the chairman, Mark Zuckerberg became fortune's businessperson of the year. Facebook which had 16.000 employess and got annual revenues almost $27 billion in 2016, with profit approximately $7 billion. In past, facebook perhaps only small business which built by drop out people. Nevertheless, now had been the biggest company in the world particulary in media and advertisement. The company has estimated to be worth $350 billion. In consequence, mark became one of the richiest man in the world and winner many award of business. He has inspired most of people. In comparison, he leader his company started since build until now. On other hand, Larry Page as chairman and CEO of alphabet, didn't leader google before different with mark. Why did he can become good businessperson? he said you must have ablity to see the world, consistency, and discipline
Facebook, one of the most enormous ~~company~~ COMPANIES ~~was~~ MAKES ~~surprised~~ people SURPRISED in the world~~.~~ Because the chairman, Mark Zuckerberg ~~became~~ BECOMES fortune's businessperson of the year. Facebook which ~~had~~ HAS*(This is a fact so that you are supposed to harness the simple present tense)* 16.000 ~~employess~~ EMPLOYEES *(Avoid misspelling)* and got annual revenues almost $27 billion in 2016, with profit approximately $7 billion. In THE past, facebook WAS perhaps only small business which built by drop out chair. Nevertheless, ~~now~~ THE COMPANY ~~had~~ HAVE been the biggest company in the world,~~particulary~~ PARTICURLALY in media and advertisement. The company has estimated to be worth $350 billion. In ~~consequency~~ CONSEQUENT, ~~mark became~~ Mark BECOMES one of the ~~richiest~~ RICHEST ~~man~~ MEN in the world and winner many awardS of business. He has inspired most of people. In comparison, he IS A leader his company started since build until now. On THE other hand, Larry Page as chairman and CEO of alphabet, ~~didn't~~ DID NOT *(Never ever ever use contraction in the formal writing)* lead~~er~~ google before different with mark. Why did he can become good businessperson? he said you must have ~~ablity~~ ABILITY to see the world, consistency, and discipline.  
  
**Note: Please, before you upload your summary, you should reread to diminish your misspellings.**
Hi, let me give some suggestions for you, perhaps useful.  
1.In comparison, he is a leader in his company started since builded until now.  
2. Onthe other hand, Larry Page as chairman and CEO of alphabet, ~~didn't~~ did not lead~~er~~ google before ~~different with~~ ( wrong collocation) mark  
3.he said that~~you~~ we( because mark gives us the his advice) must have ~~ablity~~ (miss spelling word, ability) to see the world, consistency, and discipline.  
  
4. In the past, F acebook perhaps only small business which built by drop out chair  
5. ~~employess~~ --->employes  
6. ~~richiest~~ -----> richest
Hi Alfin,  
Here's my inputs and remarks towards your article summary. I hope you can follow through.  
  
- Facebook, one of the ~~most enormous company~~biggest companies , was surprised people in the world.  
- This is because the chairman of Facebook, Mark Zuckerberg, became Fortune's businessperson of the year.  
- Facebook ~~which had~~has 16.000 ~~employess~~employees and ~~got~~earns annual revenues for almost $27 billion in 2016, with profit at approximately $7 billion.  
- In past, Facebook perhaps only small business which built by ~~drop out people~~uneducated person .  
- Nevertheless, it now ~~had been~~has become the biggest company in the world, ~~particulary~~particularly in media and advertisement.  
- The company has been estimated to be worth $350 billion.  
- In consequence, Mark became one of the ~~richiest~~richest man in the world and ~~winner~~won many ~~award of~~ business awards .  
  
As you can see, most errors were related to spelling, grammatical range and accuracy. Try to be more careful next time :)
Facebook~~,~~ is one of (...) which was ~~one of the most enormous company~~ was surprised ...  
  
Because of that, ~~Because~~ the chairman, Mark Zuckerberg has become ~~became~~ fortune's businessperson of the year in 2016(when) .  
  
Facebook ~~which~~ had 16.000 employees and earned ~~got~~ annual revenues...  
  
In past, facebook was~~perhaps~~ only small business which wasdeveloped by~~built by~~student who drooped out from Harvard University.~~drop out people.~~  
  
Nevertheless, it has been ~~now had been~~ the biggest company (...) and advertisement service .
Hello Alfin, let me give my correction for you  
  
~~Facebook, one of the most enormous company...~~I think you rewrite in this formthe one of the most enormous companies, Facebook, was surprised people in the world  
  
winner many awards of business (you must add letter s because many is indicate the plural)  
  
He ~~has inspired~~had been the most of people.  
  
he ~~leader~~lead his company which started since build until now. (this sentence needs verb lead not leader, and the connector "which" to connect two sentence together)  
  
thank you Alfin
here some advice for your writing,  
  
Facebook BECOME one of the ~~most enormou~~BIGGEST company was ...  
IT IS Because the chairman, Mark Zuckerberg, (PUT COMMA HERE) became THE fortune's businessperson of the year. Facebook ~~which~~ had 16.000 employess...  
~~In past~~BY THE TIME , facebook perhapsont#0000FF]IS only small business which built by drop out people. Nevertheless, IT now ~~had~~HAS been the biggest company ...  
  
... man in the world and , FORTUNATELY, winner many ...  
~~In comparison,~~(THERE IS NO COMPARISON HERE) . he ~~leader~~LEADS his company started ...  
OnTHE other hand, Larry (...) CEO of alphabet, ~~didn't~~DID NOTDO NOT USE ABREVATION HERE leader google ...
Hi Alfin, below are my thoughts on your essay.  
  
- ~~was~~has surprised ~~people in~~ the world.  
- ~~Because the~~The Chairman, Mark Zuckerberg  
- became ~~fortune's~~Fortune 500's businessperson  
- revenues of almost $27 billion in 2016,  
- ~~In past, facebook perhaps only~~Facebook was a small business which was built by drop out ~~people~~students .  
- ~~Nevertheless, now, had been the biggest~~Needless to say, thecompany has become one of~~in~~ the worlds biggest company, particulary  
- ~~In consequence, mark~~following this event, Mark became  
- and ~~winner~~won many business award ~~of business.~~  
  
There you have it Alfin, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and as usual I left a few sentences for you to practice writing and hone your skills in writing.
hello alfin  
I have some corrections for you  
hope it works  
  
Facebook is one of the most enormous ~~company~~companies~~was surprised~~surprising people in the world.  
  
... Mark Zuckerberg becames fortune's ~~businessperson~~businessman of the year.  
  
Facebook which had ~~16.000~~**<<< be careful to use dot since it means comma in our country**  
  
In the past, facebook perhaps only small business which was built by drop out people.  
  
Nevertheless, now it had been (...) in the world ~~particulary~~particularly in media and advertisement.  
  
... became one of the ~~richiest~~richest man in the world ...  
  
thanks
Facebook, one of the most enormous ~~company~~ COMPANIES ~~was~~ HAS surprised people in the world.  
**\*singular/plural issue  
\*should not use passive. ruin the meanin**g  
  
*Because the chairman, Mark Zuckerberg became fortune's businessperson of the year.***hard to understand. may you want to say** : as a result, Mark Zuckerberg, the chairman, has become a fortunate business person of the year  
  
Facebook ~~which~~~~had~~ HAS 16.000 employess and ~~got~~ GETS annual revenues FOR Falmost $27 billion in 2016, with ~~profit~~ approximately $7 billion PROFIT. In THE past, facebook ~~perhaps~~ WAS only A small business which IS built by drop out people. Nevertheless, now IT ~~had~~ HAS been the biggest company ...  
  
The company has BEEN estimated to be worth AS $350 billion. ..... **THERE TOO MANY ERRORS ON THE REST OF YOUR SUMMARY. YOU NEED TO CONCERN ON IT AND REVISE IT IF YOU WANT TO ENHANCE YOUR SKILL**
Facebook, one of the ~~most enormous~~~~company~~(biggest companies has)~~was~~ surprised ~~people in~~ the world. (this is ) Because the chairman(of facebook) , Mark Zuckerberg became...  
  
Facebook ~~which had~~(has) 16.000 ~~employess~~(employees) and ~~got~~(earns) annual revenues (for) almost $27 billion in 2016, with profit(at) approximately $7 billion.  
... which built by ~~drop out people~~(uneducated person) . Nevertheless, (it) now ~~had been~~(has become) the biggest company in the world ~~particulary~~(particularly) in media and advertisement. The company has(been) estimated to ...
Aboard traveling is the most famous journey recently. Many people take on their view that learning of the other culture of each country is unique experience that not the all of people can get it. Watching is easy method that to get more information about the another country in the other places, and also there is different way to know anythings about the country that called is visiting the place.  
  
Firstly, the method that needs low cost, easy to do, and has flexible time doing it by are watching television programs, films, or videos. Nowdays, the programs give more information about anythings, mainly the life of other of countries, such as culture, food, destination, or education. This choice only need low cost because we just watch it in house, park, or wherever and whenever that we can do it. Also, many devices which support to get more information about other countries only by watching, such as our handphone that has many features particularly youtube. We just type the keyword of our information of country that we need and finally we can get much informations about it.  
  
Secondly, the another way to learn about the country is actually visiting this place. The traveling option make certain learning for everyone who study a real situation of the state. We can see and enjoy the situation or building evidently. Also, we may make interaction with local inhabitants and learn the culture of life or education too.  
  
In my view, the conclusion is watching that easy and flexible method to learn about the country, but the visiting method is too important thing that can use to get more information about the country on visual sense and maybe unavailable in programs on television, video, or film.
Hallo yurike.. i want to give some suggestions toward your essay..  
  
First of all, you need put your question. If you did not put it you just make people or reader confuse.. so be carefull..  
  
Now lets continue to the content..  
  
*Aboard traveling is the most ...  
... learning of the other culture of each country (...) that not the all of people can get it. Watching is easy method that to get more information about the another country (...) also there is different way to know anythings about the country that called is visiting the place.*  
  
**1. ABROAD TRAVELLING -> TRAVELLING ABROAD  
ABROAD IS ADVERB SO IT MUST PUT BEHIND  
  
2. OTHER CULTURES (OTHER MUST BE FOLLOWED BY PLURAL IF ANOTHER SINGULAR)  
  
3. DO NOT USE ARTICLE THE IN MANY VERBS YOU MUST MINIMALIZE IT  
  
4.WATCHING IS EASY METHOD TO GET (YOU DO NOT NEED PUT THE CONJUCTION THAT BECAUSE GET IS VERB INFINITIVE)  
  
5. DIFFERENT WAY -> DIFFERENT WAYS  
  
6.ANYTHINGS -> EVERYTHING (ANY CAN BE USED ONLY IN NEGATIVE OR QUESTION FORM)**
**Question:  
  
Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.  
How true this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?  
  
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.**  
  
**Answer :**  
  
In the past, only certain people can journey abroad to other countries. Particularly, just rich people who have much money to spent for visited some beauty countries. As we know, there are various countries in the world and have many thews such as culture, food, languange, building, and many more. Recently, many programs on tv shows about journey to many countries in the world. The program can caused everyone imagined about circumstance of life in other country.  
  
Therefore, journey programs nowadays became one of the most popular program on tv. It can changed perspective which making someone thought to prefer stay at home and just take information from tv or internet to know about something, like many places in outside the country and prevented curiousity to observed or learnt about culture and many things in other country.  
  
Furthermore, in my view unfamiliar place which we dont't know before is good for visit. Because it can improved our knowledge and open our mind to the world. When we visited the new place and saw directly in there is different when we just watched that on tv. We can interacted with the local people, met many new friends and feel the atmosphere.  
  
In conclusion, It's good for you to get much information from tv or internet about some interesting place in other countries. Eventough, perhaps you know about that, but you also to feel that directly, because is very diverse when you just see on tv than you try to visit it.