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Old power is like currency and new power works like a currency .New power is not held by few ,it is made by many.New power is not facebook page ,inherently positive and invetable victor, for exmple,in fact, this is not normative argument that we are making,there are many good things about new power but,it can produce bad outcomes,more participation ,more peer coordination, and unsprisingly,as many of these new power models get to scale.  
  
The interested of new power is the way it feeds on itself.Once you have an experience of new power,you tend to expect and want more of it.And so,the experience tends to embolden you and it tends to make you want more participation across more aspects of your life.  
  
New power can give the values and what new power values look like ,it is such as new power values prize tranparency above all else.
Dear Salam  
You've done well. but there are several inputs.  
  
1. The ~~interested~~ interesting of new power is the way to know itself. ~~it feeds on itself.~~  
  
2. ... you want it more and more without any limitation. ~~you tend to expect and want more of it.~~  
  
3. the experience tends to embolden you and it tends to make you want more participation across more aspects of your life.  
  
good job.....
In the 11th century, England had responsible twice invasions which changed the nation. This country has more adequately invader. It defeated two conquests in the site only 50 years which impact on culture, politics, law and language because Danish conquest in 1016.  
  
After thirty years, all area surrounded by Scandinavian overhand by England. Denmark people ruled belong Svein while Cnut and an England kingdom separated between King Elthered and his young prince Edmund. Over time England has not be able to maintain among 6 months of class against Cnut's armies whereas it did not have planned final victory for Cnuts at Essex in eightieth century. Soon after after Edmund passed away six weeks later, Danish-Norman dynasty become formed.  
  
The last story, even Cnuts has not the first Danish King in the UK but he founded more less impact in the English kings. Further his generations were responsible by the epochal situation of year 1066 become history and collective memory in England people.
Hi Pha, the followings are my humble comments  
  
In the 11th century, England had responsible twice invasions which changed the nation. (this sentence is confusing, what is your objective?)  
  
Please pay attention to the meaning of your sentences and flow of your paragraphs.  
  
After thirty years, all area surrounded by ... ( maybe you want to say: After thirty years, all area(s) surrounded by Scandinavian (passive: were overhanded) by England)  
  
Thank you.
During an economic crisis, many animals in Venezuela's Caricuao Zoo, for instance rabbits, tapirs and birds undergo starving since the administrator of the zoo faces the financial problem to buy animal's food. The decline of oil price is considered as a factor causing economic downturn, thus the country may not supply the basic needs and other necessity including animal's food. The zoo's worker have been feeding lions, tigers and elephants with fruits. In the long term, this situation will affect negatively to animal's health , while it is able to impact on psychology at the short time. In may, three animals died causing others are moved from Paraguana Peninsula to a park in Merida. In fact, the condition is not only in Venezuala but also in other countries and has been becoming global problem. In march, 200 animals died in the Khan Younis zoo in southern Gaza because of the lack of feed as the result of the war between Palestine and Israel. In addition, the Taiz zoo in Yemen also experiences the same circumstance.
Dear Aris  
You've done well, i adore the way of your writing. But, there are several inputs for me.  
  
1. please pay attention with your tense, i think since your are describe the past phenomenon, you need to use past simple on your note.  
2. kindly look at your plural or singular word, don't forget to put "s" if it is singular.  
  
During an ~~economic crisis~~**financial crisis**, many animals in (...), tapirs and birds ~~undergo~~**underwent** starving since the administrator of the zoo ~~faces~~**faced** the financial problem**s** to buy animal's food.  
  
The decline of oil price ~~is~~**was** considered as a **principal** factor ~~causing~~**caused** economic **was** downturn, thus the country ...  
  
The zoo's worker**s** have been feeding lions ...  
.., while it is able to impact on**animal**psychology at the short time.
**IELTS Summary Task:Learning Vacations**  
  
In recent years, surveys show almost one-third of travelers each year more prefer choose learning program more than other types of vacations. The main reason is they can enjoy the value of a vacation with new ways, not only just spending their time for useless thing. A couple of years ago, types of vacations are more preferred for young people such as students of French spending their time studying language in Paris and students which is focus on marine environment learn how to diving and accompany researchers become their assistance. Now, so many travel programs offer some educational endeavors. For example schools in Britain providing some courses such as history and philosophy for travelers in which enroll in residential colleges around the country or travelers can honing their cooking skills and how to prepared traditional meals. Not only got new experiences, but also improve knowledge and skills.
In recent years, survey~~s~~ shows almost one-third of travelers each year more prefer ~~choose~~( redoundand) learning program more ...  
... value of a vacation with new ways, not only(SHOULD FOLLOWED BY BUT ALSO) just spending their time for useless thingWASTING TIME .  
  
( BE CAREFULL WITH GRAMMAR AND CHECK FIRST BEFORE UPLOADED)  
GOOD LUCK!
As the youngest female airplane captain, Kate McWilliams 26 years old have experienced about 100 journeys around the world. Many people were surprised and impressed with her achievement in young age of 26.  
  
Last year the airplane informed to increase the number of female to be pilot. However, Kate was not the youngest ever female captain when Sarah Henry on the age of 24 joined in the same company.  
  
13th years old was her first time flying on the airplane and she never thought before the she would be a commercial pilot. Starting her carrier, she joined in aviation training Southampton and became co-pilot in May 2011. Nowadays, she is known in the rank of captain after passing the airplane's command program.