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***Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language. Do you agee with this opinion?***  
  
The majority of people regard that to attain valuable insights of others cultures. It is compulsory to speak the same language as they use. I would regard that this idea is true. Even thought, for some aspects, I have an opposite opinion.  
  
On the one hand, the language can reflect people's culture. This is because it is an essential tool to communicate and scholars can analyze people's behavior through how they use the language. So if people speak the language of a country, they attain an array of cultural information. For example, it has been known that nearly all Sundanese people find a difficulty how to make a sound of letter "P" properly. They cannot pronounce distinctly between letter P, F and V. As a result, foreign people realized that they should not force them to pronounce those letters correctly since it is one of their behaviors that hard to be addressed.  
  
On the other hand, people have an opportunity to understand other culture without speaking their language. There are several activities could be carried out to get more comprehensive understanding regarding the culture of a country. The first method is to read book and journal. That provides a lavish number of information of the country regarding their behaviors, characters and how people interact and mingle with their neighborhood. It also supplies recent data since cultural researches have been conducted annually. In addition, traveling abroad will be a beneficial factor to understand a culture because people are able to interact directly with native citizen and adapt with new cultures they believe.  
  
In conclusion, it is clear to me that although learning language helps citizens to understand about other culture. There are alternative methods which more effective to gain a large number of information such as reading the cultural book and watching a movie.
~~Even thought~~ ,Eventhough , for some aspects, ...  
  
... it is an essential ~~tool~~method to communicate and scholars ...  
["tool" could not applicable in this context] So [you should insert coma in here] if people speak the language ...  
... distinctly between letter P, F ~~and~~or V.  
  
... a beneficial factor to understand ~~a~~the culture because people (...) adapt with new cultures ~~they believe~~.  
  
... although learning language helping citizens to understand ...  
  
note: keep writing and go ahead
hi mr lincoln..  
please let me.. please..  
to suggest you some advice.. :)  
  
The majority of people regard that *to attain valuable insights of others cultures*[you need the next sentence as it is a clause that need subject and verb] .  
  
*I would regard that this idea is true. Even thought, for some aspects,...*[you need to make it as compound sentence, connect these two sentences together with even though conjunction]  
  
... it is an essential *tool*[method / means / mechanism] to communicate and scholars ...  
..., they attain ~~an array of~~[much][an array is for countable noun, but 'information' is uncountable noun] cultural information.  
... people find a difficulty ~~how~~[just come directly to the to infinitive] to make a sound of ...  
As a result, foreign people ~~*realized*~~[realise][you want to explain the fact, so you need present tense] that they should not (...) their behaviors that [is] hard to be addressed.  
  
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Sleeping in the same bed with kids is so common right now. A study tries to dig about the effect of it, is there any negative effect caused by this culture. The researcher engaged 3,583 children in Brazil. It evaluated with various intervals, researcher observes internalised disorders (such as anxiety or depression) and externalised issue (like oppositional defiant disorder, any kind of ADHD, or a conduct disorder). The survey showed that kids who sleep with their parents had a higher risk of mental health rather than who does not. New discovery found that sharing a bed with the kid can cause prone anxiety and depression. The American Academy says that it is better to let the baby stay in parent's room until at least six months old.
A study tries to dig about the effect of it,...  
*dig is not a proper word. dig means to break up and move soil using a tool, a machine or your hands  
for information/effect you better use 'seek out/find out*  
  
... various intervals, **the** researcher observes ...  
  
my suggestions:  
you should add the method of research as using questionnaire  
the percentage of the answer because you just picked up the most problematic from other reasons
**Some people think that person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language.  
Do you agree with this opinion?**  
  
Languages are the important tool to communicate with other people around the world. Some people regard the languages as the only way to understand the culture of a country. There are several reasons why I believe that knowing how people speak in their language is not the predominant way to understand the culture of the nations.  
  
There is no doubt that language is the utmost important instrument to communicate with people. In fact, language, as the identity of country as well as culture, becomes reflection of the culture itself. People can deducing the culture of a nation by comprehending their language. Taking Javanese culture, one of the Indonesian cultures, as an example, the majority Javanese speak calmly and slowly. It can be expected that they have polite and friendly culture. Different to people living in Medan, a city at North Sumatera, they speak much louder than Javanese people and more impolite. It can be indicated that they have strong personality and though culture.  
  
However, there are also another way to apprehend a country culture such as learning their customs or their behaviours. For instance, some Hindi people usually pour milk to their statue, which regards as their God. It reflects that they respect their God with the best material from their environment.  
  
In brief, even though some people have mind-set that speak other country language is the only way to understand the culture of a country, but learning from not only its language but also its customs and behaviours are the best way to comprehend the culture of a nation.
Hello nda18  
i have some advice to you, hope it can help you  
  
People can deducing the culture of a nation by comprehending their language.  
**......i think you should use verb bare infinitive *(deduct)*, because after using modal *(can)* have to follow by VBI**  
  
the majority Javanese speak calmly and slowly  
**.... you should use of between *majority* and *Javanese***  
  
Different ~~to~~ people living in Medan, a city at North Sumatera  
**.....collocation of different is *from*, so you should change *to* with *from***
Hi nda18. Here are my suggestions for you.  
  
... language is the utmost ~~important~~(you can also write utmost as "uttermost" as the formal word) instrument to ...  
... as the identity of a country as well as culture, becomes a reflection of ...  
People can ~~deducing~~deduce the culture of a nation ...  
... one of the Indonesian cultures~~,~~ as an example, the majority of Javanese speak ...  
it is Different to people living in Medan, a city at North Sumatera,(.) they speak much ...  
... personality and though culture as well .  
  
However, there ~~are~~is also another way ...  
  
... some people have ~~mind-set~~mindset that ~~speak~~speaking other country  
  
Suggestion:  
In your second body paragraph, you should emphasize your statement that there is another way to understand the culture. you can give other ideas or examples in this paragraph.  
  
Goodluck.
Some locations, which are visited by distinct people's background that live in Australia, including those who were born in Australia, new migrants born in English-speaking country as well as in other countries, are presented in the bar chart measured by percentage. Overall, the most significant fact to emerge is that cinema becomes the most attraction place to visit by all different people in that category. Moreover, zoo and library are in the second places while theatre is the least attraction location to visit.  
  
To begin with, cinema is in the first place as the most attraction place, in which more than 50% or above different people living in Australia visit this spot. However, people born in Australia sit in the first bar chart which hit 70% and it is followed by new migrants who were born in English-speaking countries as well as in other countries which reach around 65% and 50% respectively.  
  
Subsequently, zoo and library are in the second locations to visit by average people in category, in which zoo becomes the main attraction reaching at 50% for new migrants born in English-speaking while library becomes the primary attraction spot which hits roughly 55% for new migrants born in other countries. In addition, theatre is deemed as unattractive place to visit by distinct people's background, the lowest in the bar chart in general.  
  
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Hi Amril,  
  
Let me just rephrase your introduction to make it look stylistically better.  
  
*A breakdown of the information about the locations visited by three different groups of people who live in Australia is depicted in the bar chart. It is measured in percent. Overall, the most significant fact to emerge is that Cinema becomes the most attractive place to visit whereas Theatre turns out to have the least percentage among three other attractions.*  
  
It depends on the data itself. I am not really sure that it is necessary to write all the data in the introduction. This can make the introduction becomes bulky and too-informative. Your summarizing skill is being tested here. You can just see the prompt if you are not really sure about what you are going to do. I hope this instruction would remind you "**Summarise** the information by **selecting and reporting the main features**, and **make comparisons** where **relevant**".  
  
Hope this helps :)
Hi..  
good writing..  
let me give some suggestions..  
  
..., are presented in the bar chart ~~measured by percentage~~[it seems confusing, you don't need to put that info] . Overall, the most significant fact ~~to emerge~~[make it simple, don't infuriate the readers] is that cinema becomes (...) visit by all different people *in that category*[what category? you could explain more] .  
  
I hope it helps..
**Writing Task 2-Understanding the culture by speaking the language**  
  
Culture is a complex heritage that runs in the blood across generations, it includes the way individuals communicate, this terms leads to the opinion in which individual may only understand what the others talk about if they understand the language. Relating this issue, I stand on the line that comprehension in communication not only relies on cultural mastery of that local language.  
  
Being connected with the people is not merely about language itself, there are several instruments within individuals that allow us to engage in. Firstly, as a remarkable creature, human nature enables individuals to recognize expressions. Research shows that expression is a universal media across all the cultures around the world that gives occasion to get the meaning of someone's feeling. Furthermore, there is also cross culture intelligence, according to the review of some literatures, this kind of intelligence brings the individuals have the ability to aware and notice other cultures manner without have to be a part of it.  
  
In addition, it is something generally admit that it is very hard to understand the culture of a country as a whole package, it is due to the numerous of local languages and cultures exist. For example, in Indonesia every region has local tradition and particular language to communicate. However, this is not making a relational problem, because this varies result in a national language. Therefore, even though the people come from different background they still can contact each other.  
  
In conclusion, as there are myriads of cultures in each country, it does not become a boundary to get along. Concerned with this, preserve the cultural components is beneficial regarding that contrastive tradition teach us to fully functioning in appropriate way to appreciate the diversity.
Hi Ms. Dils  
this is my review for the first paragraph of your essay  
  
... the way individuals ~~communicate~~communication , this terms ~~leads~~lead to the opinion in ...  
~~Relating~~Relating to this issue, (...) that ~~comprehension in~~comprehending communication ~~not only~~ relies on ... **(after 'not only', you have to add 'but also....' )**.  
  
help mine to :)
Hi Dils  
Let me give you some correction  
  
... that runs in the human blood across (...), this ~~terms~~term leads to the opinion ...  
  
... nature enables individuals to ~~recognize~~recognise expressions.  
... according to the review of some piece of literatures, this kind (...) and notice other ~~cultures~~cultural manner without have ...  
  
However, this is not ~~making~~triggered a relational problem,..  
  
... teach us to fully functioning in (an) appropriate way ...  
  
Thank you...
**Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language  
Do you agree with this opinion?**  
  
## the importance of speaking a local language

  
  
Recently, some people argue that in order to understand the culture of a country, we must speak the language. But, I strongly believe that way is not suitable for every people.  
  
On the other hand, there are several reasons why we do not have to speak the language in order to learn the culture of a country. The first reason is the literature give us much information than verbal knowledge. For instance, nowadays the college students learn a lot of cultural information about a country in literature sources such as books, journal, and encyclopaedia. Learn their language also give a lot of information for academic purposes but language skill much useful in order to communicate with a foreigner. Another reason, most of the people now learn the culture of a country which informed in another language. Finally, the manifestation of culture can be found in many ways such as cultural dance, festival, food, statue and more.  
  
However, I have a reason why an ability to speak the language also gives advantages in order to understand the culture of a country. In specific isolated tribes which are no information about their culture an ability to speak their language is the most important ability. For example, in recent centuries, European explorers travel around the world and visited several unknown countries. In order to learn their culture, European explorers have learned their language in order to learn about their culture because at this time there is no information about that country.  
  
In conclusion, I believe that an ability to speak the language is not an essential part in order to learn the culture of a country. Nowadays there are several literature sources such as books and journal and available in several languages. However, in the past, an ability to speak is very important to understand the culture of a country. For recommendation, it would be better if every people learn the culture and also learn their language.
Hi Yonathan, I want you to obtain some suggestions from me  
  
here we go  
  
For instance, ~~nowadays~~["nowadays" should in initial of sentence.] the college students ...  
~~Anothe r~~Other reason, the most of the people now ...  
... food, statue and more over .  
  
... language is the most important of ability.  
... the world and visited several ~~unknown~~unfamiliar countries.  
... language is not an essential part ~~in~~ofin order to learn the culture of another country. Nowadays [insert coma in here] there are several (...) as books ~~and~~ journal and available ...  
  
note: keep writing and go ahead
Hi Yonathan, let me give some advice, perhaps useful for you.  
1. For instance, nowadays the college students learn a lot (...), and encyclopaedia. ---> you should put "Nowadays" in the beginning of the sentence.  
  
2. ~~On the other hand,~~ there are several reasons why ...----> In my standpoint, position of the "on the other hand" is inappropriate. There are several reasons why we do not have to speak the language in order to learn the culture of a country is appropriate to support your statement in the above.  
  
3.Nowadays there are several literature ...----> you should be put comma after nowadays
**With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messanging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past.  
  
To what extent do you agree?**  
  
These days, making a conversation with other people in the internet is so common in the society. Some people believe that it eradiates a simple dialogue like people had done in the past. I totally believe with this projection and this essay be able to discuss about some reasons why it would happen.  
  
The reason why people tend to make some discussions via internet more easy. This is because there are lavish number of social media that give simplicity to talk with people who far from our place. For example, most people now have gadget such mobile phone. They can use it to communicate with their family, client or customer. As a result, people do not neccesitate to move from their own place and almost all of people fell convenient to do that. There is no doubt that this could change the ancient manner of conversation.  
  
In addition from the previous reasons, there are some factors why recent people are more likely to choose modern-chat. To begin, in the modern period people need a technology to support their daily life. For example, sometimes worker who have hectic schedule in their office use a social media to consult with their colleague. Futhermore, most people believe that talking in the facebook, taking as an example, is more economical than face-to-face communication. To illustrate, they tend to open their mobile phone if they want to communicate than have to go out from their house.  
  
To sum up, the predominant factors as a reason why communicate via internet more common these days are more ease, cheap, and can help busy employees. Without a doubt i extremely believe that social media can vanish the ancient talk method.
***Some people think that to lead a successful life a university degree is important. Others believe that this is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.***  
  
Studying at university means enhancing knowledge that is the first step to developed ourselves. It is often argued that it is positive development, whilst others think that it is waste of time .From my point of view, it agreed that university degree is significant ,and it will be showed by analysis of both the point of view.  
  
Some believe that students get chance to pursue challenging master and doctorate degrees in their fields at university . Most of these learners turn researchers and help the progress of the world. Moreover some may be able to come up with new invention from their researches. For example, many students has find out many medicine that is incomparable like insulin .Furthermore, it improves attitude, intelligence, abilities and sagacity that make student more capable to address new difficulties in society.  
  
Others; however, argued that universities degrees is hindrance for some achievement at early age. They think that it make unable students to be fulltime job holder after completing high school. Despite of working, if student enroll university ,they may lose opportunities to earn money and thus they might not be able to reduces the financial burden of their . Another one, school graduate working might be created a feeling of responsibility. As a result, the person becomes more independent and self reliant at younger age itself.  
  
From my perspective , Tertiary education has significance in the modern era .This education has given enormous benefits to learner to be more inventive themselves for new invention .On the other hand , there are many who got success without such degrees . For instance, Steve Jobs, co-founder of Apple, who have only graduated from High School, but he have a successful life. This perspective is partially agreeable , but I strongly believe and feel that higher education is power that can be used for the betterment of economy and living standard .  
  
To be conclude, Despite of having success without higher study, it is commonly seen that university degree holder are able to do many different thing that always work for wellbeing of the whole world . Thus it is clear that a university degree is imperative for leading a successful life.
Hello,  
Hope you doing well, lemme give you some suggestion  
  
==> It is often argued that it is (a) positive development, ...  
==> ..., it agreed that university degree is significant ,and it will be showed by analysis ... (make it clear, what are you agreeing to?)  
==> Some believe that students get (a) chance to pursue (...) in their fields at (the) university .  
==> ... be able to come up with (a) new invention from their research~~es~~ . For example, many students ~~has~~(have) find out many medicine that is incomparable like insulin (how this work?, you can expand your sample using 5W1H to strengthen your view) .  
  
==> ... that make student more capable to address(capable of addressing) new difficulties in society.  
==> ... universities degrees is (are) (the) hindrance for some achievement at (the) early age.  
==> They think that it make unable students to be full ...(this sentence prone to make me confuse)(they think that it cause student cannot or unable to be a full-time job after holder.............) .  
  
==> Despite of working, if (the) student enrols university ,(...)t not be able to reduce~~s~~ the financial burden of their(s) .  
==> ... independent and self(-) reliant at younger age itself.  
==> ... given enormous benefits to(a) learner to be (...) for (a) new invention .  
==> ..., but he ~~have~~ (has) a successful life (sharpen your example using 5W1H) .  
==> ... that higher education is (the) power that can (...) of economy and liv~~ing~~(e) standard .  
==> To ~~(be)~~ conclude(d) , Despite of having ...  
  
Good luck and keep writing :)