dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
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After indicating the number of bar graphs, end the sentence. Follow it up with 2 separate sentences that identify the upresented information per graph. The separate identification sentences will add clarity to the summarized information which, in this version, is difficult to differentiate I You may assign image numbers such as Bar 1 and Bar 2, to help you clearly refer to the image being analyzed in the data paragraphs.  
  
Your ERA abilities are limited to run-on sentences and comma usage. These will not help increase your score in this section. familiarize yourself with actual complex sentence structures to help increase your GRA potential. There are other punctuation marks, aside from a comma that can helpyou score better as well. Vary your punctuation usage.
## **University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income.**

  
*To what extent do you agree or disagree?*  
  
It is sometimes argued that all students should be provided with free higher education. I completely disagree with this idea, because I believe that it does not tackle the root of the financial problem students face but could lead to undesirable outcomes.  
  
In my opinion, only deregulating tuition fees would not solve any problems of the financial burden on young people. The argument in favour of free university is often that it should increase access to higher education for students from disadvantaged backgrounds. However, I believe this to be a very shortsighted view, as it usually does not cover other significant expenses that matter for them. For example, the idea of free education simply not address the rising cost of living including accommodation, food, transportation, and other necessities. Thus, poor families may still not afford to send their children to university, even if they are not charged any tuition fees.  
  
At the same time, I would argue that a free higher education system could cause unnecessary difficulties. Firstly, such a system would cost governments billions of dollars, which often means they have to raise taxes to make up for that loss. However, it is clearly unfair to impose this burden on taxpayers as they do not profit much from the education of others. Secondly, I also doubt that job markets can absorb the overwhelming number of graduates in every field that a free-education system may supply. Currently, many countries are struggling to address the high unemployment rate of those with a university degree, and free universities will only aggravate the situation.  
  
In conclusion, while free higher education might seem like a good idea, I believe that such a system would be unworkable and largely pointless. *(285 words)*
should be provided with free higher education.  
You forgot to restate the portion of the original prompt indicating that this belief is regardless of income. Your prompt restatement Is partially incomplete in this case. Regardless of this missed paraphrase, you still did an excellent jobin presenting your response and thisis statement. The basis of your measured opinion is very clear to the examiner. Expect a good TA score because of this. You somewhat successfully represented the TA requirements. Good job!  
  
The first sentence of the fist reasoning paragraph was a bit confusing to read. However, your succeeding explanations clarified its meaning. so the GRA reduction forthat paragraph should be minimal. In totality, the reasoning paragraphs are well supported and connected in terms of discussion which are pluses for your C+C score. The only somewhat notable problem I sel is in the reverse paraphrase /summary conclusion. The introductory sentence should have been supported by a summarized reasoning presentation as required by this section. Otherwise, you did a highly acceptable job in relation to the task.
***Fossil fuel, such as coal, oil and natural gas, is extensively used in many countries which cause harms to the environment. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, however, is being encouraged in many countries.***  
  
## Is this a positive or negative development?

  
  
People have different views about whether it is better to utilize fossil fuels' energy for human consumption or renewable resources such as wind, solar or water. While there are some detrimental impacts in the use of wind or solar power, I would argue that using finite sources instead of fossil fuels brings more benefits to human lives  
  
On the one hand, the use of solar or wind energy is more likely to have various cons to some extent. Firstly, visible strong energy like sunlight or a lake may have some extra effects which might severely influence the human race. Since those energies start from the prime resources of the universe, it is more inclined to form some alternate negative substances to our health, or even more, it will overwhelm our electrical devices. For instance, some houses in some countries were on fire due to the overwhelming technologies run by solar panels. Secondly, it is not relatively affordable for some developed or poor countries to own the number of technical machines to transfer the power into useful sources for our human consumption. As a result, they hardly catch up with developing and affluent countries and be obsolete.  
  
On the other hand, I would claim that it is highly dominant to use more energy from the Sun or tidewater. Firstly, reducing the amount of oil, gas, and coal and encouragingly using the power from solar or tide energy might cut down on the running-out of those non-renewable resources. According to statistics, the recent UK's environment record is getting decreased due to policies for operating solar energy for human necessity. Furthermore, wind and solar power are more likely to be the most powerful infinite resources to keep providing energy for the necessity of human lives. If we do not take the action for that issue, the fossil resources will be used up soon.  
  
In conclusion, while using renewable resources such as solar or wind energy is not a preferred option to some countries, I would believe that it would be the best method to save up the reserves from fossil fuels.
more benefits to human lives  
Incorrect response. You are being asked to respond clearly to whether this is a positive or negative development. Itis not related to the benefit of human lives. Your topic restatement is correct, but the question response is wrong due to the error in subject reference.  
  
The discussion format used is of the comparative kind when the question clearly indicates a single , defense format. The score will be reduced for the TA and C+ C sections as the scores can only be applied to the sections that late to your clear opinion. since your question response maybe seen as incorrect, the whole discussion may be considered incorrect aswell. It may be difficult for this essay to get a passing score.
TOPIC:  
***Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports like tennis or swimming is better.***  
  
## Discuss both views and give your opinion

  
  
In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been placed on individual and team sports, which ones are better. In this essay, I am going to examine the question from both sides and give my own opinion.  
  
On the one hand, there are plenty of reasons why people participate in individual sports. Firstly, this kind of sport can give competitors opportunities to develop their own independence. To be specific, playing single sports requires participants to cope themselves because they do not have any assistance or support from teammates. Secondly, single sports are likely to foster a sense of competition; therefore, players will be more determined, competitive. In other words, they could build up their discipline, sharpen their determination, and learn how to make detailed plans to achieve their own goals.  
  
On the other hand, playing sports in teams and groups brings a plethora of advantages to joiners. The first point is that it would raise a sense of belonging and consolidation for each participant. It is a good illustration that when joining a football team, players could have chances to improve teamwork skill, learn how to support, collaborate with other team members in a strategic way, and even sacrifice themselves to get as many scores as possible. In fact, it would teach players many valuable lessons about fellowship that are of benefit to them. A second point is that collaborative sports might help players to upgrade their mindsets and have a more open mind. Indeed, when being a member of a sport team, individuals can be more unassuming, cooperative, and learn the way to obtain advice and remarks from others willingly; otherwise, people might be isolated and eliminated from the team.  
  
In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance, however, it seems to me that team sports can be better than individual ones. This is mainly because it might give people more benefits than playing single sports.
give my own opinion.  
For clarity and prompt adherence, you can state your opinion directly provided it will help show support for one of the 2 public perceptions provided. something along the lines of; " and explain why my belief is that team sports serves more benefits to the players." Or something like that /similar to that. Clarity off opinion is always a TA booster.  
  
In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits.  
You need to present your,opinion not asaconclusion but as a standalone paragraph, The instruction clearly requires 1 3 paraphs aff information discussion. Your essay basically responds to 2 out of 3 instructions with your conclusion in an incorrect format so the discussion there will not be considered for scoring. Only the reverse paraphrase should be present in the conclusion.  
  
In the end, you might still get a passing score , but due to the misplaced personal opinion, and lack of 2nd reasoning topic development in the paragraphs, that may be unlikely.
## Many people go to university for academic study

  
  
Concerning the issue of study people hold different views.Whilst an army of people persist the idea that students attend university to further their education.The others are of the opinion that they should be pursued vocational training .This essay will elaborate these two schools of thoughts with some facts being closely examined.  
  
It is undeniable that the many benefits of higher academic study entice a large number of people to attend university. First of all, students who have a university degree can find quality and well-paying jobs. This is because students going to university would acquire professional knowledge for a particular type of work,such as teacher,doctor,lawyer.Moreover, students can learn many other soft skills such as presentation skills, communication skills, negotiation skills, teamwork skills. These skills will help support well in establishing relationships; as well as achieve high efficiency in future work.  
  
However, I agree that more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because of the following reasons.Firstly, students who do vocational training could reduce their time in study. Because completing a program in vocational schools takes less time than that in ordinary colleges or universities. In Vietnam, for example, it takes about two years to complete electrical vocational training, while they would need at least four years if they go to university for academic study. Another reason is that vocational training specializes in providing students with vocational education and technical skills. As a result, students could gain practical working skills quickly in actual situations, and they would find it easy to perform particular tasks when they start a job as a worker. Furthermore, vocational training could become the key to the lack of qualified workforce question. Currently, many projects have been slow down due to the insufficiency of laborers, especially for the electricity system and water system. In contrast to the limited demand of the academic workforce, skillful laborers are always in high requirement in all countries.  
  
In summary, studying at a university or a vocational school has different benefits. I believe that each choice is fair and necessary for modern society.
This essay will elaborate these two schools of thoughts with some facts being closely examined.  
This shows the part of the discussion instruction that you did not understand. You are discussing the 2 different ideas without offering a clear opinion on the topic. There is no response to the question: " To what extent do you agree or disagree? " You did not offer a measured response anywhere in the essay. An error of this kind will result in a failed TA score due to a lack of clear opinion. Add the wrong discussion format, from a single opinion in the original, to a comparison essay in your version, and you can see why the remaining scoring sections cannot help you pass the test . How can you pass when you did not understand the instructions and write the response as instructed? Always respond and write as per given instructions. double check everything, make sure your writing is in order before submission.
## are individuals accountable for their health or not?

  
  
It is a well-documented fact that an increasing number of people over the world are drawing attention to taking care of health. While there are some people who strongly believe that individuals are accountable for their health, others claim that it is a government's responsibility to keep city drawers fit. Therefore, some major arguments both for and against this issue will be addressed in the following paragraphs.  
  
On the one hand, each person has a responsibility to take care of his well-being should be taken into account . Firstly it is commonly believed that everyone's health is difficult and one knows exactly what is beneficial for his body and what is not. Based on the report provided by that individuals have to look up productions, which is beneficial for their health. For instance, people should avoid consuming unhealthy food such as junk food, soft drinks which lead to a higher risk of contracting cardiovascular disease. Moreover everyone should do more exercise and build up their muscles. Apart from that, people must sweep away bad habits such as drinking alcohol, stick to the computer for a long time or stay up late.  
  
On the other hand, there are two primary points for other people to defend the view that authorities should make sure that citizens are healthy. First and foremost, it is undeniable that governments should allocate more funds to the maintenance of existing fitness facilities as well as the construction of new ones. This is supported by the fact that authorities collaborate with nonprofit organisations to set up chain new sport centres and encourage city dwellers to build up their strength and stamina with reasonable prices which enhance the citizen's sporting spirit. In addition, authorities should prohibit production and selling some items, which are harmful for fitness. The governments should fine people who smoke cigarettes in public heavily and tax some companies, which produce unhealthy commodities, highly.  
  
In conclusion, from the above explanation, individuals and government share equally duties, to ensure a healthy life and well-being.
The prompt for this essay falls under the 3 paragraph requirement based on the writing instruction "Discuss both points of view and give your opinion". As such, the TA score, and the final score for that matter, cannot achieve a passing score. You failed to discuss the necessary requirements under the stipulated format. Why did this happen? You somehow, either through actual intent , or understanding error changed the discussion requirements. The discussion went from an analysis of 2 public pov and a personal perspective to :  
  
some major arguments both for and against this issue will be addressed in the following paragraphs.  
This is a prompt deviation that totally altered the original instructions. You should have reviewed the prompt again for your writing adherence prior to deciding that you addressed the topic concerns properly. There is no clear reflection of public perception in your writing, only a personal point of view. The essay became a 1 sided opinion response rather than the expected 3 paragraph analysis of public and private beliefs on thetopic.
Education is the biggest concern of everyone around the world. To improve the quality of teaching, some countries have single-sex education models while in others mixed schools are prefered. Personally, I agree with the latter point of view.  
  
Some countries have already had the single-sex school and the school for both sexes. Because people believe that this action will help students be more concentrated and prevent them from being distracted. To some extent, it really efficient and is the right thing to do. Moreover, in the same gender, pupils will compete with each other and be judged equal without any sex discrimination. For instance, in South Korea, there are many single-sex schools, and from reality, we can see how efficient those schools are.  
  
On the other hand, the aforementioned point of view is quite short-sighted. With regard to the aggressive psychology of adolescence, the more we try to put them into two different schools, the more they want to know about the other gender. This feeling will encourage students to make a way for communication or even make a close relationship. Then, our effort to build single-sex school will bring about the counterproductive result. Therefore, in my opinion, I think girls and boys should be educated in the same school. It does not only reduce the curious thinking of student but also help them be used to with the other gender, and adapt quickly to the environment in university where having students of both sexes. However, in both-sex school, teachers and principals should pay more attention to sex education for students. I think it is extremely necessary in general.  
  
In conclusion, there are advantages to both systems. Personally, because the mixed school outweigh the single-sex school in most aspects, I believe that the school with both sexes is the better choice for pupils. But hopefully, times have changed, and both genders of student should have a chance to choose whichever system they want to learn.
It is important that your discussion paragraphs reflect the explanations required by the original presentation. Your essay reflects only your personal point of the discussion based on your understanding of the 2 public opinions. The discussion though, requires you to use the standard 3 paragraphs for the reasoning portion based on a series of explanations :  
  
Paragraph 2: Explain the importance of the public opinion supporting the discussion based on a valid reason. Refer to 3rd person discussion references.  
Paragraph 3: Discuss the value of the opposing party and the convincing factor behind it. Present this from the 3rd party viewpoint.  
Paragraph 4: Offer your personal opinion that could support one of the 2 public opinions. You may also opt to have a totally different opinion as explained by your personal experience or knowledge. 1st person references will be useful in identifying your opinion.  
  
The important part of this presentation are the public and private analysis of consideration points. Your discussion must follow the discussion format/ paragraph presentation as indicated to recieve full scoring values. Your current work will only get partial scoring values as it does not deliver discussion considerations as expected  
  
There is an optional format you can use to simplify your writing. Offer your personal point of view in the paragraph after explaining the public POV. That way you won't have to write a stand-alone personal opinion paragraph. It will aid in your C + C score to a certain degree as well.
***Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.  
## Discuss both views and state your opinion.***  
  
Nowadays, there are a lot of people believe that riding a horse is a kind of international exercises events which will bring benefits to the city. However, some citizens did not agree this statement because it may bring a lot of disadvantages. Therefore, in ths essay i am going to express my opnion about the benefits and drawbacks of hosting.  
  
First of all, the benefits of hosting. In these day, hosting is becoming famous, more and more people are enjoy watching a competition about hosting. Therefore, it can let people to share their experience to other people who are having same interest. Through share their same hobbies, they can build up a great communication skills. Not only make more friends, but also the competition of horse can benefit the local economy and travel business because people may travel another coutry to watch the show. It is benefit to the community development. Also, it can maintain the cooperation of different country by organizing a hosting competition. So, hosting is good for the city development.  
  
However, there are some drawsbacks of promoting hosting in a country. Firstly, it may led people become low-income and increase the finacial support of the country. Since some people may addict to the competition of hosting, they will pay money in the show. But, they may get lose in the show which may let them loose their money and become poor seriously. Consequently, the government need to peovide financial support to them which may increase their burden. In addition, hosting may affect the mental health problem of people. It may make them low self-confidence and low self-esteem. This issue will increase the medical pressure. Therefore, it may increase the burden of country government.  
  
To conclude, there are a lot of advantages and disadvantage wheter hosting is good for the country or not. It may benefit to the development of the country. Unfortunately, it may affect the policy and increase the burden of the government. in order to benefit the citizens and the community, the government of different country should consider this issue carefully.
Nowadays, there are a lot of people believe that riding a horse is a kind of international exercises events which will bring benefits to the city.  
There was never a reference to equestriane sports in the original prompt. Whatever compelled you to change the discussion topic? This is a red flag that indicates you didn't understand what the writing topic is about.  
  
express my opnion about the benefits and drawbacks of hosting.  
Okay. At this point, you just gave the examiner the valid reason to give your essay a failing TA score. You are not discussing the essay based on the provided format. you decided to create your own topic and discussion forumat. Both of which are the opposite of the following:  
  
*Original Topic:Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad.  
Discussion Format:DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND STATE YOUR OPINION.*  
  
Compared with:  
  
*Your Topic: ...there are a lot of people believe that riding a horse is a kind of international exercises events which will bring benefits to the city  
  
Your Format: ...i am going to express my opnion about the benefits and drawbacks of hosting.*  
  
As you can see, the marked opposites in the presentations will automatically fail the essay. You proved a lack of Eenglish comprehension skills in relation to the discussion. You cannot pass the test with such an erroneous presentation.