thilini, you are still not familiar with the various types of responses meant for the Task 2 essay. You turned an ordinary opinion essay into an emotional essay. Again, you will lose major points for misrepresenting the prompt requirement in the discussion. You also veered too far away from a proper paraphrase of the original prompt. The first paragraph must always contain the following information.  
  
1. A topic restatement based on your own understanding  
2. The reason for the discussion in your own words  
3. Your thesis statement  
  
Let me give you an example based upon the prompt for this topic:  
  
*Academic learners are often challenged by the concepts of Math and Philosophy. Since not all students excel in these fields of education, there is a suggestion that these two subjects should be discretionary in schools. I do not agree with this statement for several reasons.*  
  
The opening statement should always reflect the original prompt information and an appropriate thesis statement because this paragraph is testing your English comprehension skills. The comprehension skills are scored based on the accuracy of your prompt restatement and accurate thesis statement. What I presented above is an example of an appropriately formatted restatement. Under no circumstances should you start your discussion in this paragraph due to the 5 sentence maximum rule per paragraph. There is never enough room in the opening statement for a full discussion of your reasons if you write the opening statement in the proper manner.  
  
Not all the essays will be extent of opinion essays. So you should never rely on only one presentation for your thesis statement. Review the numerous Task 2 essays in this forum in order to familiarize yourself with the various Task 2 thesis presentations. That way, you will learn how to properly present the required thesis statements in your succeeding practice tests. In this instance, the mistake in your thesis statement created a tangential response yet again.  
  
Your paragraphs need to have a consistent sentence number presentation. The proper format for the Task 2 essay is 5 paragraphs containing anywhere from 3-5 sentence each. Each paragraph needs to have the following information represented:  
  
1. Topic sentence  
2. Reasoning 1  
3. Supporting explanation 1  
4. Supporting explanation 2 (optional)  
5. Example sentence  
  
Now, unless the prompt asks you to "discuss both points of view and offer your opinion", you should not refer to the other side of the discussion at all in the opinion essay. Only the side that you support must be discussed. It should not even be used as a topic sentence as part of the introduction to your personal opinion. Your personal opinion must be immediately presented in the personal opinion paragraph.  
  
The concluding paragraph should also be within 3-5 sentences. This time, you need to represent the following:  
  
1. A new representation of the discussion topic  
2. The thesis statement that you proposed at the start in a new manner  
3. A summation of the given discussion using the topic sentences from the body of paragraphs  
4. A restatement of your opinion  
5. A closing sentence  
  
I have detailed the proper representation of each required section of a Task 2 essay for you. I hope to see you applying these information in your next practice test in order to correct your errors and improve your score. In the meantime, build upon your English vocabulary as it is only a beginner level at this point and most importantly, familiarize yourself with the various Task 2 essay formats. Your biggest scoring hurdles at the moment are the TA and GRA sections.