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***The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy.  
The benefits of nuclear energy overweigh the disadvantages.***  
## Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

  
  
While the lethal power of nuclear weapons has long been a threat to humankind and the union between countries. Many argue that it is a green alternative energy source with lower cost and this merit outweighs the downside. Despite its potential merit, I disagree with the latter idea and believe that the downsides are much more significant.  
  
Many people believe that atomic energy has the potential to be the leading source of energy. The colossal environmental cost of fossil fuels has led to nuclear energy, a type of power that is both eco-friendly and inexhaustible. In fact, the developed nations nowadays all have their own nuclear factories to provide electricity and they have substantially helped further the modern industries, bringing about a prosperous economy. However, looking at its deadly nature once leaked out to the environment, all of that thriving scenarios pale into insignificance. Take the Chernobyl power plant's radiation leak as an example. The city in which this factory is located is now a ghost town. The radio destroyed everything and rendered the area surrounding the power station uninhabitable for potentially thousands of years.  
  
Further, the fact that many powerhouses in the world possess the secret of nuclear power poses such a threat to global peace. No one knows at any time in the future, a third world war will explode. If it is the case, the elimination of nuclear power now may be of utmost importance as battles using nuclear war will claim not only thousands of lives but hundreds of millions of people. In addition, nuclear weapons can possibly fall into the wrong hands in the black market. Thus, its existence has never ceased to be a danger.  
  
In conclusion, while there is no denying that nuclear is cleaner, more powerful, and cheaper than non-renewable sources of energy, its benefit is all eclipsed by the potential threat. If no drastic steps are made to eradicate this type of weapon, human existence will be jeopardised.
The writer will do good to remember that there is a 40 minute time limit on the writing, editing, and finalization of this essay response. As such, he should not be writing 327 words as an explanation for his opinion. Due to the additional review work needed to increase the scores per section, he should write only 300 words. Use a timer next time, follow the outlined writing tasks to learn exactly how long it will take you write the correct number of words. The ideal scoring length is 275 - 280 words.  
  
While the prompt restatement and writer's opinion are well presented in this work, the writer fails to apply the same writing accuracy in his reasoning paragraphs. For starters, he should have known that atomic energy cannot be mistaken for nuclear energy. These are 2 different energy sources and cannot be used interchangeably nor as synonyms for one another. This is the biggest vocabulary error in this essay since it alters the source topic and will lead to discussion confusion for the reader/examiner.  
  
Another issue is that the writer provided a non-required opinion about the state of mankind in relation to nuclear energy. This is considered a topic deviation that has resulted in an open ended essay. As the essay now lacks a proper concluding summary, it may receive a failing score for not being completed / formatted based on the required writing format.  
  
As far as thinking in English goes, the writer has the ability to think straight using the English language. However, he also tends to lose track of the correct discussion focus for the essay. This is a problem that could lead to further deviant essay discussions in the future. He should always double check his writing against the original prompt to prevent this.
## uk residents in travel

  
  
The line graph compares the trips to and from the UK between 1979 and 1999 while the bar chart illustrates five countries that most attracted the British in 1999. Overall, the initial impression is the UK saw a higher increase in their citizens travelling abroad than in their foreign visitors. It is also evident that France was the most attractive destination for British visitors.  
  
Regarding the line graph, in 1999, the numbers of UK residents visiting overseas was nearly 15 million, which was higher than that of people arriving in UK (10 million). Toward the end of the period, while the figure for visits abroad made by the British experienced a dramatic increase by 40 million, the number of visits to the UK by foreigners tripled to nearly 30 million.  
  
In 1999, over 10 million UK residents visited France, which was considerably higher than that of Spain (9 million). Next in ranking was USA, with is figure being one third that of Spain. Meanwhile, Turkey and Greece are the least favored of all the examined countries, with just 2.5 and 2 million UK visitors arriving in these nations respectively.  
  
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The line graph and bar chart are provided as 2 separate images. These are not collective representations. The focus of each image is different. Therefore, these cannot be presented in the summary as a continuing sentence presentation. Each image requires a stand alone sentence and a stand alone trending reference. The trending references must also indicate the image type within the trend, just to make sure the reader is not confused about which trend belongs to which image.  
  
Image differentiation seems to be a problem for this writer. He just assumes that just because he has mentioned one image type in the previous paragraph, there is no need for him to mention the second image when discussing its content. Discussing the content, without referencing the source will cause confusion for the reader. The more confusion there is, the less chance of the essay getting a passing score.
***Topic:  
Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on societies.***  
## Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

  
  
People have different views regarding the importance of robots in societies. While some think that the benefits of these machines will make them an essential part of future societies, I strongly believe that robots may affect our lives negatively in the long run.  
  
On the one hand, robots have benefited our lives considerably. People do not have to do manual jobs such as cleaning cars or packing items because robots can do them much more effectively and efficiently. Unlike humans, these machines can handle strenuous work for long hours without taking a break, and as a result, products that were once expensive can now be mass-produced and labor has become much cheaper. Additionally, people will have extra time to unwind or focus on other important issues. For example, instead of sweeping and cleaning the floor, my uncle bought a robot to do that for him and in the meantime, he focuses on his job.  
  
On the other hand, I think robots can have negative effects on our societies in the long run. People will become too dependent on these machines and may expect them to do all the work, including the most simple ones. Some of these expectations are very bad because they demotivate and disillusion people. For instance, I happened to meet a few students who had an illusion that someday, a robot will be invented to do all their homework and assignments and I believe that these thoughts of being dependent on robots keep students from trying their best to finish their works. In addition, the unemployment rate will rise because robots have handled most of the strenuous and manual labor. This can lead to bigger problems such as destitution or an increase in crime.  
  
In conclusion, although robots have some advantages that can benefit our societies greatly, I think that in the long term, these machines will affect human societies in a bad way.  
  
*I really appreciate any kind of feedback. Thank you in advance.*
The prompt restatement is an incomplete depiction of the original presentation. The writer must always provide 3 points of view for the discussion with personal opinion presentation. These points of view are:  
  
- The pro public opinion  
- The con public opinion  
- The writer's personal opinion  
  
While these may be presented in no particular order, it is best to present the writer's opinion last since this sentence requires the supporting reason or thesis presentation to back up the opinion. A review of the above listing will show which point of view is missing from the presentation.  
  
The provided prompt outline also highlights how the discussion paragraphs are incomplete in presentation. There is a missing comparative point. As such, the overall discussion can only be scored based on a partial consideration. When any aspect of the discussion is missing or lacking, the writer cannot receive full scoring merits. The missing paragraph could prevent a passing score from being provided.
***In education and employment, some people work harder than others.***  
## Reason? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

  
  
In educational and workplace settings, there is often a difference between people regarding their hardworking level. In my opinion, this can stem from the variety of personal goals people set for themselves. I also believe that working and studying conscientiously all the time is not always positive given the possible health problems and poor social life an extremely hardworking person may lead.  
  
Trying to realize an ambition always drive people to work harder. A student, for example, can pay his painstaking attention to each lecture while his friends are chatting if his goal is to get the highest scholarship granted by, say, his university. Similarly, a worker who desires a higher position tends to make diligent efforts to get their work done with the highest quality whereas others' care may be just to meet the deadline. It stands to reason as normally, hard work will be paid off with rewarding results. Thus, personal objectives can explain why some people devote themselves to their education or career more than anyone else.  
  
That said, the idea of working hard can sometimes stray too far. To exemplify, the student who gives up his sleep to study hours on end can suffer badly as his health is greatly abused in exchange for better results. This can also be seen in adult workers. Not only their healths are adversely affected, their social life can be degraded as well. Making more time for education and work means less time for family and friends. Furthermore, as all their time and efforts are concentrated in achieving their goals, social events at which people can widen their network can be conveniently ignored. As a result, a poor social life is expected.  
  
In conclusion, goals and ambitions are the driving force behind many people's working harder than others. Overall, this is a positive idea, however, excessive work can inevitably lead to health problems as well as limited social activities when not managed properly.  
  
Hi, I'm back. Hopefully, this essay won't make you too disappointed.
The essay is still 23 words over the suggested word count. The writer is relying on overwriting to help pass the test. Overwriting does the exact opposite. It creates more chances for errors and other deduction possibilities because the focus of the writer is not the quality of the content and use of language, but just on vocabulary. The writer does not leave any time to review, revise, edit, and finalize the content because of this incorrect writing strategy. A task 2 essay does not need to be wordy, it needs to be short, clear in discussion, and easily understandable by a native English speaker.  
  
As I reviewed this paper, the more obvious error is that the writer was using word fillers to help increase the length of each paragraph, even as it did not add to the essence or importance of the paragraph content. Such occurrences further highlight the improper grammar skills and incorrect word usage of the writer.  
  
Did this paper disappont? Yes, in a different way from before.
## The diagram below shows the recycling process of plastics.

  
***Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.***  
  
The picture depicts a sequence of the plastic treatment. Overall, it consists of two primary stages, one of which is the manufacture of recycled bottles and the other is after usage, and that period mostly depends on whether the customers would litter or not.  
  
Initially, after gathering the previously wasted products among which plastics will get filtered, workers will transport them to the main factories. It is illustrated that this place is where products may come out and get delivered into stores for public sale. At this point, buyers, after consuming the output, will have to make a decision significantly contributing to the whole process as recycling circle will once again restart if no bottles are wastefully thrown away.  
  
Otherwise, already used goods made from plastic are going to become a complete source of waste without a capability of being reused anymore. Ultimately, unless people learn to reduce pollution, this material is projected to join the garbage dump in this scenario.  
  
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I tried to follow the report that the writer developed and found myself lost when I compared his report to the images provided. It appears that this should have been a 4 paragraph report that followed the sectional processing of plastics as depicted by the images. While the writer did make a good explanation of a process, it is not the same process that is involved in the 3 processing levels provided. As such, the given report can be seen as incomplete and lacking in discussion accuracy. It is improtant that the writer recognize how the illustrations were divided into 3 different processes, creating 3 different end results. The analysis provided should have reflected these procedural divisions due to C+C considerations.
***Fossil fuels (coal, oil and natural gas) are the main sources in many countries.  
However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged.***  
## Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

  
  
It is no doubt that fuel sources such as coal, oils, and natural gas are the most consumed form of energy by the majority of the world. However, people started to replace those natural resources with renewable energy to diminish the pollutants produced in nature. This essay will explain why such substitution in energy is a positive development regardless of how few difficulties were disputed.  
  
The most important interference that needs to be concerned is the finance charges required for the installment and manufacture of energy-transferred equipment. At present, only industrialized nations with large government budgets can afford green energy operators and apply them to a wide range. Nevertheless, this is a short-term challenge referring to permanent use. Because of its infinite source of energy, the alternative solution can ensure the longevity of power usage and allows the governments of emergent nations to save money in the long run.  
  
On the other hand, renewable resources energy guarantees environmental quality compared to traditional forms of power since it is substantial and eco-friendly. As eco-consciousness started to rise, the role of these green energies became more important. This replacement in energization not only contributes to nature conservation by generating energy without toxic gas emissions but also diversifies the energy supply and benefits the economy. This method will reduce dependence on fossil fuels and offer more jobs in order to decrease the unemployment rate. For instance, numerous organizations have recruited more positions in construction and coordination of renewable energy generators which creates more career opportunities.  
  
In conclusion, even though fuel sources have been primitively used for centuries, renewable energy is considered a great substitution as its unlimited potential and nature-friendly. Thus, I am convinced this is such an innovative development in various fields.
Here is the thing about the prompt rephrasement section of this essay, it is not a mere restating of the original prompt. It is an actual beginning of the discussion. That is an incorrect interpretation of the original prompt. The original discussion interpretation should not include additional information or the writer's opinion. It must state, within basic terms, the premise of the original discussion topic and nothing more. So the writer will definitely not receive a passing score for his prompt restatement due to his improperly developed interpretation of the original discussion.  
  
The direct question posed before the writer begs him to address the response in a direct, first person pronoun manner. The essay is not going to write itself. It is imperative that the generalization of the discussion be avoided since he is not stating a public opinion. Ownership of the opinion ( My opinion is...) is the only way to get a proper score in the write's opinion consideration since it requires a clear reference to the opinion and whose opinion it is. Repeated references to the first person writer is encouraged in these essay discussion types.  
  
On the other hand is always used in unison with "On the one hand". It cannot be used as a stand alone phrase because it is part of a comparative discussion presentation. This reference causes confusion for the reader who is trying to understand whether the 2 paragraphs are connected or not. By not properly using grammar principles, the writer will lose points based on discussion clarity. By the way, the word because is always used in a connecting capacity and should not be used to start a sentence. It will do the writer well to become better acquainted with English grammar rules to avoid making these mistakes in the future.
## marketing statistics

  
  
Nowadays, advertisements appear everywhere as the competition between companies is high. There is an opinion that advertising is an important method to increase the number of sales. However, some individuals say that we often ignore it that is not effective. Today, we discuss both these views and I will give your own opinion.  
  
On the one hand, advertisements have huge influence. They can not only introduce products in a place but also around the world. For instance, Prada handbags is a famous product all over the world although Prada is a luxury fashion brand in Italy. This result is based on their great advertisement that they choose a well-known person to become brand ambassador. Moreover, how to advertise is an extremely decisive key. If we don't have a good advertising plan, it will not bring high efficiency and waste our money as well as our time.  
  
On the other hand, advertising does not pay attention. Some advertisements are impractical that do not show the truth about product's features. For example, many English learners installed grammar app on their phone or computer. Because it is advertised on Youtube whenever they watch any video. However, it brings us disappointment when they really use it. Therefore, they no longer pay attention to advertising.  
  
In conclusion, while many people no longer put their trust in advertising, I believe that it still is a great method to persuade us to buy things as people spend a long time on social media such as Facebook and Instagram which are the most popular places to advertise.
The first sentence is the writer's personal opinion and should be merged with his opinion sentence as the reasoning basis instead. Never place an unrelated discussion point at the start of the essay as the examiner will see this as a deviation and deduct necessary points for the accuracy of the presentation. He will also not appreciate the lack of opinion presentation in the same paragraph. He will definitely not give accuracy and opinion scores in the paragraph that requires its presentation when the writer does not give any opinion in the paragraph. This is an almost failing prompt restatement+writer's opinion presentation. It cannot be given full scoring merits.  
  
Actual scoring problems arise from the lack of proper discussion perspective in the discussion paragraphs. That is because all of the statements provided are solely from the writer's personal opinion / perspective. The discussion that is required needs the writer to offer an insight into a comparative discussion for each public opinion. That means:  
  
POV 1: State the topic + why the public supports it + writer's opinion (support/non support)  
POV 2: State the topic + public reasons for support + writer's opinion (support / non support)  
  
The points of view and writer's opinion may be discussed in no particular order. It does not matter to the examiner. What does matter is the clarity of the writer's point of view in comparison to the public reasoning.  
  
On the other hand, advertising does not pay attention.  
This statement makes it appear that advertisers do not pay attention to the audience. However, it should mean that the people no longer pay attention to advertisements. The sentence is misleading, unclear, and refers to the wrong audience premise.
***Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.***  
  
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

  
  
It is known that students must study many subjects in university. There is an argument about whether the university students are suggested to learn whatever they are interested in or research knowledge that will be practical in the future. In my opinion, I prefer the first idea, and my reasons run as follows.  
  
Above all, interest is the best teacher. According to a research, the remembering rate of the students who study the things they like is obviously higher than those who study the typical materials, which indicates that interest can help students learn better. When the individuals learn the knowledge they are interested in, they will be willing to keep studying it and enjoy themselves instead of giving it at the beginning. Besides, it helps to develop thinking independence and respect their right to choose. When the students choose the subjects they want, it is due to their own choices instead of being forced by others, which is good for developing their thinking independence. The ability to think independently is very significant after they graduate since there will be no one to help them make the choices.  
  
Nevertheless, the employment environment becomes severe due to the global slowdown caused by COVID-19 and it is not easy to get a job now. Studying practical subjects can make you useful in the future so that you have more advantages to be employed. So when choosing the major, the factor of usefulness also needs to be considered.  
  
In conclusion, undergraduates are supposed to study the subjects they favour with the consideration of their usefulness.