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I am a beginning learner of English. Could you give me some advice? Thank you a lot!  
  
In the past, most people would like settling in the peace villages. Nowadays, living of people have changed rapidly, a number of people prefer to move to the big cities to live. Because the living in the big cities is more convenient. There are advantages and disadvantages to becoming an inhabitant of a modern city.  
  
I believe there are three main benefits. The first point, life is very convenience. For instance, you have lots of choices for picking up a kind of transports to move from a place to another, or you can drop by the shops for food, clothes, medicine, and so on. Also, there are much chances to work. You can easily find a job that is suitable to your abilities. Moreover, the city is the best place where located many of fabulous and first-rate University. You need to arrive these destinations for learning that help you improve your knowledge.  
  
I think many of disadvantages are pollution and poison. Firstly, it is not difficult to realize the air pollution. This is totally because of the emission exhausted by all kind of vehicles. Besides, you always feel stress and tired that caused by the extreme noises such as the siren, machines, crowd...Finally, the poisoned food is one of the factors that significant took most of the city inhabitants worry about. They have to eat the food without cleared origination. All of them is not fresh and contend some agents to store.  
  
In my opinion, the advantages of living in the big cities are greater than living in the small villages. You may be living in the not good environment. However, you can enjoy the life which is easier. That sound great when we live in a place where is very simple to get something for eating, moving, relaxing...and attend to the best universities.
I am a ~~beginning learner~~ beginner of English learner.  
  
Nowadays, ~~living of people~~~~have~~ it has changed rapidly~~,~~.  
  
A number of people prefers~~to move~~moving to the big cities ~~to live.~~~~Because~~ because the living in ...  
  
There are advantages and disadvantages ~~to~~of becoming an ...  
  
The first point, ~~life~~big cities' live is very convenience.  
  
Also, there are ~~much~~many chances to work.
Here are a little correction for your writing, hope this helps.  
  
I am a ~~beginning learner of English~~ beginner of learning English.  
  
...people would like ~~settling~~ to settle in ...  
  
Nowadays, ~~living of people~~**people life**~~have~~**has** changed rapidly,  
  
Also, there are ~~much~~ many chances to work.  
Moreover, the city is the best place where located many of fabulous (..................) -----> you need to add a 'noun' after adjective  
  
I think ~~many of~~ the disadvantages are ...  
This is totally ------> totally of what? **( need a noun or an adjective after adverb)**  
  
That **sounds** great when we live in a place ...
Writing practice for Cambridge 8 - Test 3  
  
**Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problem.  
To what extent do you agree or disagree?**  
  
Traffic and pollution problems are become worse in the 10 recent years. Some government perceive that the best solution to overcome such issues is increasing the price of the gasoline which is one of the primary fuels. I personally cannot agree with this initiative solution because other ways such refinement of mass transports and high tax regulation can be more effective to solve the congestion and environmental damage of the motor vehicle uses.  
  
The better quality and quantity of public transport such as train and bus should reduce the number of private car in the big cities. Most reason of citizen using car is that traveling by car is more comfortable, so government in this case have to provide such an excellent standard of those transport modes. Since 2005, Japan became one of the successful countries that reduce the high level of traffic problem and pollution by serving their people with high quality public services in trains, planes, even in buses. Despite this, expensive taxes that have to be paid by the car owners has significantly affected on lower tendency to use private car.  
  
Another solution to address growing number of car and its damage impact is regulating high taxes. This should make workers with middle level of salary considering their choice to buy a private car more carefully. Tokyo is the best model of this regulation, which asks their people to pay the tax of a car as expensive as to rent an apartment for a year. Consequently, its citizens prefer to use train that costs cheaper than driving a private car. Having said that, the increasing petrol prices may be considered as the third solution not only to reduce congestion and emissions of carbon dioxide but also to preserve the source of fossil fuels around the world.  
  
In conclusion, the best solution of traffic congestion and air pollution is not the high price of petrol, but it should be the providing qualified public transports and regulating high taxes of having motor vehicles. I suggest that the government of developing countries can apply this solution to improve their transport system and reduce amount of damaging gasses released.
**The advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?**  
  
Nowadays, in the modern world, people like living in big and developed cities. However, the majority of people wanted to live in small and peaceful villages in the past. There were advantages and disadvantages to having living in small communities.  
  
I think there were three reasons that make me want to live in small villages. Firstly, villages were peaceful and comfortable places. They were not polluted and noisy like the cities. Therefore, your health and morale would better. Besides, people were very friendly and good-hearted. When you had any difficulties or problems in the life, they were willing to help you enthusiastically without thinking. And one more thing, which made the small villages to become a good places for living was the security and safety. The small villages did not have many crimes, robberies as the cities.  
  
I believe that living in the small villages, not the central, had three disadvantages. Firstly, living in the small communities would make you lose many opportunities to develop yourself and pursue your dream. Because most of the best company were located in the city. Moreover, quality of infrastructure was not good such as: school, hospital, library,... For example, if you were seriously ill, it took a lot of time for to go to the hospital in the city. The last disadvantages was the entertainments. In the small villages, there was very few entertainment center. As you know, in the evening, people there often watch television, talk to each other or teach their children, so you would feel bored.  
  
In my opinion, although the advantages of small villages were greater than the disadvantages, I still choose the large cities to live. The reason is that I need to live in the good conditions like the city to realize my dream and develop my career.
Hi Snowrussia  
Let me give you some correction  
  
... and disadvantages to having ~~living~~live in small communities.  
  
.., which made the small villages ~~to~~ become a good ~~places~~place for the `` living was the security ...  
I believe that ~~living~~ live in the small villages, ~~not the central~~ , had three disadvantages.  
Because most of the best ~~company~~companies were located in the city.  
... was not good such as~~:~~ school, hospital, library,...  
The last disadvantages waswere the entertainments.  
... entertainment center centre .  
  
... conditions like the city to realize realise my dream and develop my career.  
  
Thank you...
Could you help me with my essay?Thank you very much.  
**Learning to manage money is one of the key aspects of adult life.How in your view can individuals best learn to manage their money?**  
  
Growing inflation rate,numerous bills,all of these show the increasing importance of balancing our income and expense.Many people,however,find it difficult to develope the skills of how to control their own finance.This essay will discuss some approaches to learning the related knowledge.  
  
One of the practical methods is to take some classes about economic and money management.Understanding taxation,purchasing thoughfully,choosing financial products,and so on,all of these need people to be familiar with some basic financial concepts.Therefore,resigning economic classes,which can help people to bulid a systematic frame of finance,is playing a critical role in learning money management.Meanwhile,for students,there are plenty of economic lectures in the colleges,universities;for those who take part-time or full-time job,there are also online platforms providing quality lectures from excellent universities and institutions.Coursera,for example,has some economic enducations organized by the University of Illinois,the Columbia University.  
  
Another method is to query financial institutions.Financial institutions are profitable institutions,so not only do they like well investments,but they also own some professional employees.For instance,people can seek some specialist advice on how to set up a propriate spending and saving plan from them.Althogh some of them will make profit from persuading people to purchase some unnecessary and costly financial products.  
  
Finally,there are also some specialists analyse money management and the economic in their columns on magazines or websites;podcasts like Money Planet can also bring people some useful information.Though people have to read and listen with basic economic knowledge and critical thinking.  
  
In conclusion,there are numerous ways to learn the skill of managing money effectively,from which people can choose based on their preference.I think people can first go for the education and then use what they learn in practical world.
Many people,however,find it difficult to ~~develope the skills of~~**DEVELOP THEIR SKILLS ON**  
  
how to ~~control their own finance~~**MANAGE THE FINANCIAL BELONGINGS** .  
  
This essay will discuss ~~some approaches to learning the related knowledge.~~**ABOUT SOME APPROACHES RELATED TO MAJOR LEARNING**  
  
... classes about economic and ~~money~~**BUSINESS**management.  
  
Understanding **ABOUT** taxation, purchasing thoughfully, (...) with some basic ~~financial~~**ECONOMIC** concepts.
Hello,  
Hope you enjoy your time  
You have done great, yet lemme give you some suggestion  
  
==> Growing inflation rate,numerous bills,............................ income (you can use influx or profit) and ~~expense~~(expenditure/ outlay/ spending money) .  
==> ...find it difficult to develop~~e~~ the skills of how to control (arrange, set, oversee) their own finance.  
==> Understanding taxation,purchasing thoughful~~ly~~  
==> ...which can help people to ~~bulid~~(build) a systematic frame of finance  
==> ... of economic lectures in the colleges, (or) universities;for those who take (a) part-time or full-time job...  
...has some economic e~~n~~ ducations organi~~z~~ (s)ed by the University of Illinois...(your example is quite good, yet it will be more prettily if you complete with 5w1H --> help to increase your score)  
  
==> Financial institutions are profitable institutions,so ~~not only do they like~~(they not only like to do a)~~well~~(you can use good, instead) investments,but they ...  
  
==> ... advice on how to set up a propriate (Appropriate or a proprietary?) spending and saving ...(try to extend your instance by using 5W1H)  
  
==> Altho(u)gh some of them will make (the) profit from persuading people to ...  
==> Though people have to read and listen ~~with~~(to) basic economic knowledge ...  
I think, (firstly) people can ~~first~~ go (can go after the education) for the education and then use what they learn in(the) practical world.  
  
You did several typos, be careful when you were writing.  
Good luck and keep writing :)
Hello Killua,  
I would like to give some corrections to your essay.  
  
1. This sentence "Many people,however,find it difficult to ..." should be "Many people, however, find it difficult to developing the skills of how to control their own finance".  
  
2. Please make sure about some spellings on your essay because this is crucially in having good essay, for example, thoughfully, enducations, and althogh. They should be thoughtfully, educations, and although.  
  
3. This sentence "there are also some specialists ..." should be "there are also some specialists analyzing money management."  
  
Keep writing Killua :)
Hi Killua  
Let me give you some correction  
  
... numerous bills, all of these ~~show~~showed the increasing importance ...  
Many people,~~however~~ , find it difficult to ~~develope~~develop the skills of how to ...  
... for those who take (a) part-time or full-time job...  
...has some economic ~~enducations~~educations organized organised by the University of Illinois,..  
...so not only do they like ~~well~~good investments, but they ...  
~~Althogh~~Although, some of them will make profit ...  
... to read and listen ~~with~~to basic economic knowledge ...  
  
When you use punctuation marks like , or . you must give a space  
Thank you
**Summary: Environmental Impacts of Logging**  
  
The logging industry provides a huge number of raw materials for producing many products which is really useful for people. On the contrary, undeniably, this activity has several negative impacts to the environment such as losing the habitats, polluting the air and water, and causing climate change. Firstly, both terrestrial and aquatic ecosystem will disappear, in which their habitats are poisoned by erosion. Furthermore, cutting down the trees in an enormous number will pollute the air and water. Trees protect the pollution to air naturally and get rid of carbon dioxide from atmosphere when they produce oxygen. The water quality in the river also deteriorates due to the enhancing of sedimentation. Lastly, the felling of trees in large numbers causes abnormal rain cycles, flooding and dryness. The increasing of carbon dioxide emissions from some forest fires in the world also creates climate change, especially global warming.
Hello Asma, you have a good summary there! Several things that I like the most are how you put the transitional phrases properly, and also the ideas are written cohesively. To enhance your writing further, the following are several notes on your summary. I hope you can follow it through.  
  
- ...many products which ~~is~~are really useful for people.  
- On the contrary, ~~undeniably,~~ this activity undeniabl y has several negative impacts ...  
- ... ecosystem will disappear~~,~~ in which their habitats...  
- Trees protect the pollution to the air naturally and get rid of carbon dioxide from the atmosphere when ...  
- ... causes abnormal rain cycles, flood~~ing~~ and dryness.  
  
Hope this helps!
Animals normally move to a land to breeding and move back to their habit to spend a whole of the year, this phenomenon called migration. Over the centuries, observers attracted to learn about bird migration. Nature shows how they respond the biological imperative for species to thrive and overspread into all possible ecological niche by migration that serves a decisive condition for a few species to breed and raising a baby.  
  
Birds travel to higher traverse curing warm season to breeding and return back for non-breeding period. Migration offers the optimal condition to breeding and feeding. Most of the birds are migrated to Northern hemisphere. None of the species is known migrate to Southern hemisphere to breeding but seabirds.  
  
Even though almost birds migration to the lower or higher latitudes of the Northern Hemisphere, there also many species are trans-equatorial, which means they breed in the Northern side and live in the Southern land. For example, the arctic tern that breeds in the arctic territory and winter in antarctic waters travels about 24,000 miles per year.  
  
Some species take a short migration, such as breeding in the higher altitudinal, imminent or at the top of mountains and spend all the non-propagation season around by close neighbouring valley or the other nearby low country. This is the type of grouse species migration and also ptarmigan, an arctic grouse. The rock ptarmigan had never left the elevated arctic tundra while breeding season. They usually spend the breeding period at the top of the uncovering place arctic summit and the winter season in nearby valleys, bearing the coldest part on earth.  
  
Most of the bird only can fly from six to eight hours per day across several hundred miles but sometimes they have to flights further if through long water flow or other condition such as deserts or mountain. Many species cross the Gulf of Mexico, for instance, they generally have to fly away continuously over 1,000 miles, to approximately 24 hours to 36 hours or longer. There is any non-stop bird use the bar-tailed godwit during migration, so they will cross over 11,000 miles from Alaska to New Zealand every year. Firstly, bodyweight needs to be upgraded to roughly 50 percent to fuel throughout the heavy trip.  
  
The way birds manage the time properly to reach their destination has attracted observers to investigate it for over many decades. Investigators have been trying to learn about this behaviour. Many inventions found out that all migratory birds have the same ability to steer and an original drive to travel in a particular way. Nocturnal migrant is the one who flies at night, led by the star. When clouds coming up and cover up the stars, nocturnal migrant will confuse and may return back and digress. On the other side, there are several Diurnal migrants who fly following the sun. Diurnal migrants use the geographic feature for direction such as mountain ranges or seas coasts. Since night and day move regularly over the time, so the migratory birds have a sense of time.
Hello Fauziyahtami,  
Here some inputs for you.  
  
... and move back to their ~~habit~~*habitat* to spend a whole of the year..  
*The* Nature shows how they ...  
... condition for a few species to breed*ing* and raising  
Birds travel to higher traverse curing*during* warm season to  
... for non-breeding period. *The* Migration offers the  
... to Northern hemisphere~~.~~*and* None of the species is known  
Most of the bird*S* only can fly from six to eight hours (...) they have to flight~~s~~ further if through (...) as deserts or mountain*S*.  
There ~~is~~*are* any non-stop bird use the bar-tailed godwit during migration, ...  
Firstly, body *need space* weight needs to be upgraded ...  
... to reach their destination ~~has~~*have* attracted observers to ...  
*The* Nocturnal migrant is the one ...  
  
**Good Luck!**
Helo Fauziah, I want to gige some suggestions  
  
Birds travel to higher traverse ...  
(Birds travel to higher traverse curing warm season to breeding and return back for the non-breeding period.)  
  
Investigators have been trying ...  
(Investigators have been trying to learn about this behavior. )  
  
propagation season around ...  
(propagation season around by close neighboring )  
  
Good Luck
Hello everyone, this essay is my homework. It's very important. Please help me edit this homework as soon as possible. Thank you very much.  
  
In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays. most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. So, which is better : living in the large city or a small comunity. The advantages and disavantages when we lived in small villages.  
  
In my opinion, there were four main benefit. Firstly, people in small villages always knew each other, so when someone got into troubles, everyone in the villages would help to solve the problems. Sencondly, the people who lived in small villages were very friendly and generous. The inhabitants were in a quiet way of life. Next, the children in there could grow up in natural way. They did not play video games or watched TV a lot, they could play with many friends, and they enjoyed doing outdoor activities more than indoor activities. Also, the atmosphere in small villages is cleaner and fresher than in large cities, so the people were in a healthy lifestyle.  
  
However, I think the disadvantages of living in a small comunity were education, healthcare and technology. Firstly, people lived in small villages would be backward because they could not approach to advanced sciene and technology. The children in a small village also could not access to the better education. They did not learn with modern education facilities. The schools were too far and there was no public transports, so the children went to school very difficult. The other site, people did not get good healthcare, they were treated in the absence of medical equipments because the hospitals were located too far away the villages.  
  
All in all, I think the people who lived in small villages were happier. The children lived in a small comunity grown up healthy, they have better health and less illnesses. The inhabitants formed a stronger relationship, they helped each other when they had problems. However, if young people were ambitious, they had to move away from the village, they did not want to be limited to a small villages. Nowadays, there are more advantages to living in a large city.
In my opinion, ~~there were four main benefit~~ .  
**THERE ARE FOUR MAIN BENEFITS FOR THE PEOPLE WHO LIVE IN THE VILLAGE.**  
  
... villages always ~~knew~~**KNOW**each other, so when someone ~~got~~**GETS**into troubles, everyone in the villages ~~would~~**WILL** help to solve the problems.  
  
Sencondly, the people who ~~lived~~**LIVE** in small villages ~~were~~**ARE** very friendly and generous. The inhabitants ~~were~~**ARE** in a quiet way of life.  
  
Next, the children ~~in there could~~**IN THIS COMMUNITY** grow up in natural way.  
  
They ~~did not~~**DO NOT**play video games ...  
they ~~could~~ play with many friends, and they ~~enjoyed~~ ENJOY doing outdoor activities ...  
  
..., so the people ~~were~~**ARE** in a healthy lifestyle.  
  
when you decribe about a habit or daily activities, you have to use present tense
Hello Qtraam,  
I would like to give some corrections to you essay.  
  
1. These sentences: "So, which is better : living...=> should be "So, which one is better: living in the large city or a small community. Below are the advantages and disadvantages when we lived in small villages". Also, you have to make sure about the spelling because there are two words misspelling in these sentences, 'community' and 'disadvantages'.  
  
2. This sentence should be "there were four main benefits "  
3. This sentence should be "The schools were too far, and there were no public transports"  
4. These sentences: "The children lived in a small comunity ... => should be "The children lived in a small community grown up healthier, and they have better health and less illness. The inhabitants formed a relationship being stronger, and they helped each other when they had problems".  
  
Keep writing Qtraam :)
After the hurricane knocked down, a large number of Haitians died while enormous buildings were vanished in term-time. According to current official report, approximately 522 inhabitants died due to this tragedy ; moreover, it is not included the number of victims coming from remote areas as the ruins of bridges and roads had blocked the location's access. Though the Haitians experienced the worst hardship since they lost their family members and possession, most of them still did the worship in ruined Churches. They praised and prayed to the god because of giving them salvation. In addition, The authority estimated at least 350,000 Haitians needed aid whilst the biggest threat came from cholera disease. This condition was compounded by destruction of crops and limitation of health care services.