dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
## Who should be responsible for teaching children to be good citizens, parents or school?

  
  
There is a spreading belief that children ought to be taught to be socially well-mannered individuals by their parents; however, others hold that children should learn this at school. From my perspective, both are the key factors to their development into model persons, or not. The reasons why I say so will be outlined below.  
  
As regards the role of parents in educating their offspring, it is indispensable. The way parents behave can directly affect the child's behaviour and cognition. If parents treat their children properly, such as paying attention to their kids, being willing to lend a sympathetic ear to their kids' stories,etc., the children will be much better mentally-behaved compared to those not living in such a positive growing environment. For instance, the majority of homeless children or ones having apathetic parents often commit crime because of their lack of care and education from their family. Therefore, that parents deal with their children properly is undisputedly necessary to let them know how to become a good person.  
  
In the meanwhile, we cannot deny the necessity of schooling. Children generally spend from a quarter to a third of their time studying at school. Besides, we all know that the surrounding environment is the biggest contribution to personality formation. That is the reason why school has an enormous impact on the model of a citizen a child will become. If a child has caring and supportive teachers and several healthy relationships, they will have someone to talk to and share their problems with in addition to their parents, and also someone who can protect them from bullying, which is such a commonplace phenomenon in school nowadays. Moreover, school can be considered the best place to broaden children's horizons, especially in academic aspects. The better academic performance the children have, the better job opportunities they will be given. To be a socially well-behaved citizen, one must have both morality and knowledge.  
  
In conclusion, although there are people thinking parents play the main role in making their offspring exemplary citizens, while some others believe in school being the one taking this responsibility, I assume that both are all necessary in their own ways, with priority given to neither of the two views.
both are the key factors  
Though both are key factors. the response asks you to choose and defend only one side. Note the use of the word "or" to indicate a single opinion choice. While,the restatement is accurate the lack of a clear opinion based on the choice requirement will be scored down. next time, pick one side to use unless asked to discuss both views and give an opinion.  
  
stories,etc  
Etc. is a non- academic word. That is used only in casual writing, not in formal writing .  
  
I assume  
clear evidence that you do not have a clear opinion. Hence the positionless discussion. It will be difficult to say if this will be scored in any way as the discussion requirements were not met by the writer.
## to be single or to be in a relationship?

  
  
These days ,there seems to be a tendency for a growing cirlce of young to lead a single life and get cold feet to tie a knot.From my perspective, living alone has both negative impacts and positive ones .This essay will consider these sides and draw some conclusions.  
  
On the one hand, there are some edges attracting the young to lead a unrestricted life.Firstly,it authorizes them to do many things at liberty.For instance, this trend Not only does this trend provide our possibility to pursue career without being driven to distraction by nurturing children or material needs ,it also offers chance to have dating with more partners. On the top of that,such a life can avert domestic violence due to financial burden or lack of close-knit in a family. It is easy to imagine how that mode can improve the quality of life.  
  
On the other hand,we almost express apprehension about how a sole life has negative effects on the young.In the short term,it is likely that we will see a rise in loneliness.For example, a scene that we can visualize is that they find themselves in a room without encouragement but with the stressful, bumming out and even being shaken up. A long-term fear is that it will be challenged if young people are about to be a single-partent.  
  
In conclusions,while leading a single life in the young will no doubt about improving their quality of life in many ways, some drawbacks should not be ignored. Thus,the issues addressed in the essay should be given enough attention.
This essay will consider these sides and draw some conclusions.  
You have failed the essay in terms of restatement considerations at this point. The prompt, as you have provided it to me, shows the discussion as only needing a comparison of an advantage and disadvantage. There is no requirement presented for the writer to draw conclusions about the 2 sides.  
  
In conclusions,while leading a single life ... given enough attention.  
The conclusion will be another reason for the essay's low score. This time, the same errors in the paraphrasing were made in the summary conclusion.  
  
The comparison paragraphs are well developed and explained. These are supportive of the original discussion requirement. However, the esor in the restatements are what will score down the final mark.The student must make an effort to not alter the discussion rephrasing next time.
## The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons and impact?

  
  
The time that family members spend gathering to have meals is indeed reducing. While it is necessary to identify the possible cause of this trend, it is also essential to predict the effects on children and their health.  
  
There are two primary reasons why nowadays family members tend to not have meals together. Firstly, parents are usually busy with work. Some families need two incomes for financial stability so both fathers and mothers have to spend a large amount of time at work. All the stress accumulated during the working day often makes it difficult to have lunches or dinners at home. For instance, employees usually work 8 to 12 hours a day at the office, so they tend to buy their lunches rather than going back home to ensure their working time. Secondly, in some extended families, members do not get along with each other. Nowadays there are three or even four generations in a house. The age gap is getting bigger between family members, which leads to difficulties relating to each other.  
  
Several negative impacts on children are being witnessed due to this phenomenon. A lack of family meals can make children feel abandoned. Unlike surfing the web or playing computer games, having meals is often a whole-family activity. If parents do not spend enough time taking care of their kids' meals, family bonds will be weakened and children therefore will feel left behind. Moreover, this trend also has a harmful impact on children's health. Family meals were an opportunity to provide a healthy diet for all family members. Without the supervision of parents, children tend to eat junk food, snacks, or other fast food for their lunches or dinners. This will lead to many serious health diseases such as obesity and hyperactivity in the long term.  
  
In conclusion, some reasons can be identified for the decline in shared family meals and the impacts are seriously harmful.
is indeed reducing  
There is no need for you to affirm the statement. It is not part of the discussion instruction. You will recieve a deduction due to topic alteration. The willis personal opinion should not be included in a restatement presentation.  
  
While it is necessary ... and their health.  
This sentence will not recieve any score as it does not respond to the discussion qquestion and instructions. Restating the instructions is not considered part of the task requirements. However, question responses and a discussion outline is scored as a part of the task.  
  
The age gap is getting bigger  
How does this relate to the topic? The connecting example is missing, rendering the paragraph incomplete in tums of discussion requirements.  
  
Your summary conclusion fails to meet the minimum 40 word requirement. 2 sentence presentations are expected. This is another markdown.
## spending on roads and transport in 4 countries

  
  
The chart illustrates the proportion of government's money used for roads and transport in Italy, Portugal, the Uk and the US between 1990 and 2005.  
  
Generally, it is clear that there was a decrease in the percentage of government spending for roads and transport in Portugal over a 4-year period, while the figures in the USA increased.In addition, the amount of nation budget used for roads and transport was generally highest in Portugal, while the UK tend to spent the at least amount over the entire period.  
  
Looking at the bar chart in more detail, the percentage of money spent on roads and transport in Portugal reached the highest point at 27% in the first year of this period, and the figures reduced slowly to 20 % in 2005 .In contrast, the figures in the USA started at just over 10%, after which there was a slight rise from 10% in 1995 to 15% in 2005.  
  
In 1990, the government of Italy allocated 22% for roads and transport, which was more than twice greater than that of the UK and the US, at 10% and 11% respectively. The figures grew to 24% in 2000 before it dropped to 19%. The proportion of expenditure for roads and transport in the UK government stood at 10% in 1990 and hit the lowest point at 7% in the last year of the given period after it fluctuated from 1995 to 2000.  
  
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The chart illustrates  
The examiner will be looking for the specific chart name/ identifier that will differentiate it from the other types. Familiarize yourself with the image types used to help you better meet the task summary requirements.  
  
Please use at least 2 sentences in the summary overview. Seperate the image identifier and short form data from the inclusive year reference. Avoid single sentence presentations that will result in a GRA deduction.  
  
Generally  
The data is not a trending statement but a report paragraph. The tend should only report on the highest and lowest points, without any measurement reference.  
  
The writer is prone to compressed data presentations. The reporting paragraphs are difficult to follow due to the run-on presentations. The paragraphs lack clear analysis points because of the improper sentence formats.
## friends vs teachers impact on students

  
  
It is believed that a student's behavior and the result can be influenced by some causes. And I would argue that friends have more effects on them than teachers.  
  
To begin with, getting on well with classmates has a strong positive influence on students. Because of the educational condition, they spend more time with peers than teachers. They just meet the teacher in the restricted period while most of the school time is spent interacting with their friends. For example, just in Math periods, students are able to communicate with Math mentors, but they will meet other students in all periods left. This leads to their behavior can be influenced more effectively by peers because of longer interaction.  
  
On the other hand, the relationship between classmates can create a competitive environment. Students would prefer to express themselves and do their best to excel. They may bury themselves in their books in order to overtake their opponents. As a result, the academic outcomes could be improved. For instance, league tables with scholarships are a good way to create motivation for students to compete with others.  
  
In conclusion, in my opinion, the positive changes on students are mostly referred to their peers than teachers.
The essay is only 202 words long. This would normally be an automatic failing score but since the scoring consideration changes new implemented, TA percentage deductions will apply instead. Regardless, the preliminary deductions applied will cause a failing score. That is, even after scores are awarded for the remaining criteria.  
  
And  
Because  
These are conjunctions used to connect ideas within a sentence. It can only be used after an idea has been presented. This is the main reason why you cannot use it to start a sentence. The grammar structure becomes incorrect. The sentence structure would have gotten a better score if you had started with "I" instead.
## lack of social life skills among students

  
  
A number of people believed that an increasing number of high students are likely to lack social life skills. I completely agree with this point of view.  
  
The first reason for this is owing to the fact that high schools tend to teach knowledge and orientation but have not cared and focused on training life skills. Students who study in high school, are virtually wanted to study at university. The condition to be able to study at university is that students can overcome an academic test with a high score. Moreover, the entrance to university test involves theoretical knowledge and is unrealistic. Therefore, to meet the students' requirements, high schools focus on teaching how to get a high mark and do have practical skills lessons. As a result, practicing life skills is an action that students are not interested in.  
  
In addition to the reason above, I also believe that family is also a factor leading to the deficiency of life skills. Families are not frequently appreciated educating basic skill life for children due to the fact they think studying is the most vital and social skill is unnecessary. Furthermore, With the habit of taking care of their children in an environment without challenges causes students to lack opportunities to experience, explore, form, and improve life skills.  
  
For example, a recent survey shows that 75% of high school students do not know how to cook a meal by themselves. As a result, high school students are grown up on the contrary they can not live independently and this causes a detrimental impact on their future.  
  
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe there are a number of high schools students who lack a social life.
high students are likely to lack social  
This is not orginally stated as an assumption. This is a statement of fact. Do not alter the original point of view as it changes the overall prompt meaning or discussion target.  
  
I completely agree  
The thesis statement must be accompanied by the presentation of 2 topic anchors for the reasoning paragraphs. The restatement f opinion presentation is incomplete/ only partly complete.  
  
are virtually wanted to study at university  
This is an improperly structured phrase. A more appropriate presentation would be, " want to study at university". Word exaggerations such as "virtually", when improperly referenced causes confusion for the reader.  
  
For example, a recent survey shows that 75% of high school students  
The presentation does not connect to either reasons presented. As this is being presented as an example , it must be merged into one of thez discussion points. Right now, it will just lower your score because it is an underdeveloped paragraph presentation.  
  
The conclusion will not recieve a passing score as it is less than 10 words and does not sum up the discussion in the required format.
## us energy consumption by fuel

  
  
The line graph illustrates the amount of quadrillion units energy consumed in the USA with predictations from 1980 to 2030. Overall, while three resources including Petrol and Oil, Coal and Natural Gas dramatically increase, those of other energy witness 5 decades of stability.  
  
Petrol and Oil is the resource that was consumed the highest amount of quadrillion units throughout the timescale and was two times more than Coal and Natural Gas in 1890. In the first 28 years of the timescale, the Petrol and Oil energy underwent a period of instability from 30 to 40 quadrillion units before continuing to rise significantly to 50 quadrillion units in 2030. Similarly, the Natural Gas energy consumed saw a changable stage of 35 years between 1890 and 2015 until being surpassed by Coal at 17 quadrillion units in 1990, after which being predicted to remain stable at 25 quadrillion units for the last time of timescale. Likewise, Coal markedly climbe from 15 to 30 quadrillion units during 5 decades and become the second preferred energy resource after Petrol and Oil.  
  
By contrast, the consumption of Nuclear, Solar/ Wind and Hydropower vary insignificantly from 4 to 6 quadrillion units for all the time of the timescale and became the most unpopular resources. After 50 years, the Petrol and Oil still is preferred than other energy resources and be twice times more than Natural Gas in 2030.  
  
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predictations  
This is not a proper English word. It does not exist in any English dictionary version. Believe me, I checked. The word that does exist, is predictions. I believe that is the word you wanted to use. Do not makeup terms if you do not know what the actual term is. That will result in a double score deduction for you.  
  
Petrol and Oil still is preferred  
You cannot use a present tense time reference for 2030. That has yet to happen. The appropriate time reference would be connected to future tense usage.  
  
The writer must improve in 2 scoring aspects, wordusage and grammar range. Both can be improved by -exposure to more and varied English reading materials, sentence, and word choice exercises.
## bar chart report

  
  
The chart provides information on the proportion of three types of businesses access to social media for commerce benefit from 2012 to 2016.  
In general, all three kinds of businesses increased through every year, apart from 2015. The greatest usage of social media was a large company, while small businesses comprised the lowest used.  
  
Relating to small and medium companies, the period prolonged from 2012 to 2014 witnessed a climb in social media utilization. To be specific, the small businesses increased marginally, beginning just under 30% little to 35% in 2014. The change is even more pronounced in medium-sized businesses, starting with 30% in 2012, then picked up moderately to approximately 50% after two later years. Both types of businesses suffered a steep reduction in the next year, after that surged up 50% in the final year, more than 20% compared with 2015.  
  
On the contrary, large-sized companies make extensive of social media, with figures nearly always stabilizing in roundly 80% from 2012 to 2016. The sole exception to this was 2015, that the use of social networks saw a plummet by just over 50%.
all three kinds of businesses  
Refer to the business types directly as a part of the short form report. You have to do that because a specific business type in the trending reference.  
  
The chart  
There are several types of charts for task 1. This is why a general chart reference cannot be used. The specific image type is necessary for task accuracy.  
  
The first analytical paragraph is well executed. it perfectly compares the first 2 businesses. That is, as far as I can tell since you did not upload an image for my reference. I am going to have to take your word for it.  
  
The last paragraph is too brief. The analysis has expansion oom that would have helped further strengthen the analysis to the point of the previous paragraph.
## The diagram shows how chocolate is produced

  
  
The map illustrates the process of producing chocolate.  
  
Overall, it is clear from the map that there are ten steps to make chocolate from cacao trees to liquid chocolate.  
  
In the beginning, cacao trees are grown mostly in South America, Africa, and Indonesia. People plan them until they become ripe red pods. Then, after a period, pods are harvested and taken out white cocoa beans. After that, the beans are fermented and then dried in the sun to get their tans. Brown beans after sunbathing are put in large packages and transported by trains or lorries to factories.  
  
In factories, beans are roasted in the oven at more than 300 degrees. They may smell great after that. In the next step, beans are put in a machine to separate their crushes and outer shells, which are removed. Then people take crushed beans to an inner part machine to press them into liquid form. That is how chocolates are produced
The map illustrates  
it is clear from the map  
This is an incorrect image reference. A map is not used in this presentation. An illustrative diagram or diagram would be the most appropriate reference. A map refers to a representation, usually on a flat surface, as of the features of an area of the earth or a portion of the heavens, showing them in their respective forms, sizes, and relationships according to some convention of representation. Based on the definition, you can see why markdowns will apply to specific aspects of your score.  
  
plan  
Incorrect word usage again. The trees are planted . Not plan. A plan refers to a scheme or method of acting, doing, proceeding, making, etc., developed in advance.  
  
crushes  
Crushes? This does not sound right. The procedure indicates that the beans are crushed. This incorrect reference will be marked down for confusing the reader.  
  
Basically, the essay will fail lbased on LR and GRA mistakes that are prevalent in the presentation.
***Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.  
  
## Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

  
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.***  
  
It is considered by some that sharing information related to specific sectors is a good manner while others see that information should be strictly confidential due its worthy and importance. In my view, it depends on the attitude of each individual when deciding to circulate information.  
  
On the one hand, in fields such as science and academic work, it is essential and crucial to spread information in relation to specific topics. This would contribute significantly to scientific researching and education. To be clear, writing research papers is a required work to many students and post-graduates as they would need to referencing and citing many documents for their papers. The more research papers conducted, the better education we receive. The book named Homo Sapiens, for example, is the huge dedication to our science, which clearly explains the origin of human beings from that we attain more knowledge about our history.  
  
On the other hand, many think that some information ought to be kept in secret because of its value. In terms of personal information, it is true that the act of spreading this type of information should be considered. Moreover, for some information which is an important project to many researchers using their knowledge and spending long time completing. That kind of information should be paid to access, which is a reward for authors' diligent work. For instance, many e-books published by Springer are required to be paid out in case the users want to read.  
  
Finally, in my opinion, whether sharing information publicly or keeping it in confidence, depends on the attitudes of the possessor. To be specific, many research papers can be found on the internet on a wide scale covering various topics. It shows that those owners or authors have no problems with uploading their works on public community and somewhat this action might support many people in relation to finding documents for their papers. Moreover, some are even ready to share private things online without any hesitations; in contrast, a handle of people would feel that some information needs to be off the record.  
  
To conclude, sharing information helps to develop several areas in our life, but it still a sensitive issue since the viewpoint of each person may vary when sharing their documents.