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Undoubtedly  
This is a personal reflection of the author. It is not an accurate prompt restatement. Kindly remember that the willis opinion can only be presented in the opinion sentence of the same paragraph.  
  
I hold same opinion  
You cannot just hold the same opinion due to the extent nature of the response format. This is an inaccurate representation of the required answer as you do not an emotional reference to your opinion (strongly, wholly, partially, to the point that). You have provided a low scoring response.  
  
Team activities can teach people increase their social skill because frequently connect with people that realize the way how to get alone with each other.  
  
That is useful way to learn the skill of social include communication and body language.  
These are score deductible presentations as neither is a completely developed thought presentation.  
  
According to a study conducted by National Taiwan University,  
Avoid presenting sources for your data measurements. Learn to format your information in a general manner. For example:  
  
It is commonly known that...  
Public knowledge indicates...  
Due to my exposure in... I know that ...
## Benefits of Learning English

  
  
Good afternoon everyone. I am Duc. Today I'm going to talk about-\*\*the importance of learning English.\*\*  
  
English is the language of International Communication, although it can not be the most spoken language in the world, but English is the official language of 53 countries and is spoken by around 700 million people across the globe. So English is a useful language for us. \*\*Firstly\*\* learning English can help the students in the study. If you study well, you will get a good score in the study, you can get an English certificate like..... \*\*Second\*\*, learning English helps us communicate more effectively and travel easily. When we can communicate with foreigners fluently, it is an opportunity for you to have a good job. \*\*Thirdly,\*\* learning English is also an important condition for you to access and update knowledge sources from around the world. Nowadays many websites are using English such as famous software, applications, most popular social networks, and newspapers, and some other information. \*\*Finally\*\* learning English helps you be active in social life, be confident in communication and always want to discover cultures all over the world. \*\*In conclusion\*\*, Learning English will be an advantage for us both in work and study and life. We can have a higher salary life, expand our knowledge and sometimes feel proud that we can speak a second language.  
  
Thank you for reading.
\*\*the importance of learning English.\*\*  
Are you writing a short speech or something similar? It feels like this part is important and should be written based on proper capital word usage guidelines. It would have helped to properly format this part for vocal emphasis when being read to the audience. Speeches have emphasis markers, which this presentation severely lacks.  
  
~~although it can not be the most spoken language in the world, but~~  
This is irrelevant to the discussion since you are discussing the importance of the English language in general. comparisons with other languages used internationally is not a consideration as that alters the discussion topic.  
  
The written format can use some work. I read at least 3 paragraph divisions here. The seperations will help deliver proper pause points for listening comprehension , if delivered as an oral speech.
## Ielts writing task 2 about Wild animals

  
  
Topic: Some people believe that all wild animals should be protected. Others say that only a few wild animals should be protected. Discuss both views and give your opinion.  
  
There is an argument about whether we should protect all the fauna or not. Whilst many people believe that every kind of animal should be put under our consideration, I believe that we had better put a priority on some specific kinds.  
  
On the one hand, protecting all wild species tends to be a long-term endeavor. To begin with, as a result of rapid industrialization, the natural environment that provides animals with shelter, habitat, and food has decreased. For example, because a wide range of factories on the river's bank discharge their chemical waste into the water, the aquatic environment is detrimentally affected leading to the decline in the variety of fish. Furthermore, animals play a vital role in biodiversity and the food chain, supplying us with meat and flora with fertilizer from their decomposition. Thanks to early protection such as breeding programmes, we can halt the decline in reproduction caused by overexploitation and uncontrolled poaching, which will eventually lead to extinction.  
  
On the other hand, I believe that protecting a certain species is far more feasible and urgent. Firstly, protecting wild animals on a large scale is exorbitant for the reason that each conservation campaign and sanctuary requires a significant amount of resources and funding. Instead, we should focus on pressing challenges such as starvation and deadly diseases that many third-world countries have struggled with . Second, providing protection to multiple species that are not endangered may lead to the overpopulation of wild creatures, which could pose a threat to our survival. For example, if the number of rats, mice, and grasshoppers impairing agrarian production increases, farmers may have to shoulder a financial burden to cover the loss and subsistence expenses.  
  
In conclusion, wild animals should be protected owing to their vital roles; however we should prioritize endangered species in order to address other emergency problems.
When you are asked to give both views and provide your opinion, the writing method of the task totally changes from singular opinion to comparative + personal opinion. That means, you have to provide a personal opinion based on the public reasoning consideration for each opinion. You cannot base the discussion of both opinions solely on what you think about it. This is a writing instruction that is clearly provided by the keywords "Some people" and "Other people" providing their views, also known as an opinion. So the discussion centers on what you believe to be accurate or inaccurate reasons behind the basis of their opinion. While you did a good job of providing your personal discussion for both opinions, that is not the sole discussion format needed for the presentation. You will not get a passing score when only the personal opinion is presented rather than the comparative discussion.
## [IELTS Task1] Driving test pass rates

  
  
**The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.**  
  
The bar chart compares the proportion of women's and men's driving test passed in one Asian country from 1980 to 2010.  
  
It is clear from bar chart that women have a higher proportion of driving test passed than men in one Asian country throughout the period shown.  
  
In 1980, the percentage of women who passed driving test stood at around 50%, while the proportion of men passing driving test just were under 30%. Over the following 20 years, the percentage of passing driving test both for women and men that showed an upward trend. Also, the figures of women and men succeeding driving examinations rose by around 20%.  
  
Between 2000 and 2010, there were little changes in the percentage of women and men who succeeded driving examination. The percentage of women passing driving exam fell slightly by around 2%. On the other hand, the figures of men were the same, at about 50%.  
  
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Go for a more complex sentence structure in relation to the time measurements. Itis more impressive to say" ... covering a full decade from... " than simply . the coverage years. A little sentence structure complexity will always help your LR and GRA scores.  
  
~~in one Asian country~~  
This is a redundancy or repeated phrase. You do not have to mention the location twice. Once is enough to help you avoid being judged as using memorized phrases. If you want to mention it again, then change the word presentation through proper synonym usage.  
  
for women and men ~~that~~ showed an upward trend  
That adjective does not need to be used in the sentence. at created an unfamiliar sentence presentation due to the incorrect word formation / structure.  
  
The writeh just need to address some written grammar issues going forward. Otherwise, the written presentation is acceptable and may recieve a lease passing score overall.
## online learning evaluation

  
  
Against the backdrop of the ongoing COVID-19 pandemic, online learning has been widely introduced to solve the problem of schooling disruptions. Personally, I subscribe to the belief that the benefits of such a development absolutely overshadow the downsides.  
  
On the one hand, there are a multitude of merits that online learning confers on students. In the first place, the introduction of online learning helps maintain education. In the face of the pervasive spread of COVID-19 leading to many schools and colleges' close-down, learning via the Internet allows students to continue their incomplete study in the safest way. Secondly, online education also assists pupils in building up essential skills. As students stay at home and study without the teacher's strict supervision, they are required to form their awareness of self-study in order to maintain good scholastic performance and not to miss out on lessons given by their teachers. Furthermore, they also need to learn about time management and computer literacy so as to facilitate their learning process.  
  
On the other hand, the drawbacks of this development cannot be neglected. Firstly, on account of the freedom to start learning at any time during the day, online learning makes it easier for students to procrastinate, which is likely to give rise to low educational quality. However, this drawback can be eliminated with stricter surveillance of parents and teachers. Secondly, online learning does not ensure equally-dispersed opportunities of education for all kinds of students. To demonstrate, there are some impoverished pupils whose parents cannot afford expensive digital gadgets, so they are certainly unable to keep on their study as other privileged peers. It is beyond dispute that such a method of education may arouse some kind of unfairness among school attenders during this period of time. Nonetheless, those students could join with their peers who can afford a device and study together, which enables them to get exposure to online lessons as equally as others and even .  
  
In conclusion, online learning conspicuously brings both merits and demerits to students. Nonetheless, I highly believe that the advantages of it absolutely eclipse the disadvantages for all aforementioned explanations.
Personally  
As this is an advantage versus disadvantage discussion, you are not obliged to give a personal opinion. In fact, you are well advised to avoid such a perspective reference as this is not a task requirementin this essay as it would have been in an agree or disagree or personal opinion essay. This will bea task deduction from the applicable sectional score. A general discussion reference is what is needed here.  
  
Furthermore, they also need to learn  
This reference should not have been included in this paragraph anymore. The writer failed to properly develop the topic focus,which affected the cohesiveness of the paragraph negatively. What should have been used instead is a transition paragraph that effectively introduces the next paragraph topic.  
  
It is beyond dispute  
Actually, there are some who will dispute this claim. Such personal opinion references must be avoided in the A V. D essays because of its non-requirement in the discussion. A neutral tone mustbe used throughout.  
  
Nonetheless, I highly believe that  
I assume you already understand why your opinion does not matter in this essay right?
***A survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.***  
## ***Summarize the information and make comparisons***

  
  
The bar chart above demonstrates the proportion of how people in five Australian cities bought their coffee and tea last month.  
  
As to the option of getting coffee or tea at a coffee shop, the percentage of Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart accounts for half of the city residents, and the first three cities were even over 60 percent. The left city, Adelaide, reached about 49 percent, which was also nearly half of the city residents.  
  
For the choice of buying instant coffee, five cities remained in an interval of 45 to 55 percent, while the proportion of Brisbane and Hobart both exceeded 50 percent, which was 53 and 54 percent respectively.  
  
As to the last alternation, purchasing fresh coffee, the percentage of Brisbane reached merely 35 percent, which was the lowest and presented a great gap compared to the former options as well.  
  
In general, despite various percentages, almost five cities present the figure in a similar order. That is, going to a coffee shop for coffee or tea accounts for the most, except for Adelaide shows a slight difference as the first and the second reverse. At the same time, getting fresh coffee is the least preferable option among the residents of the five cities.
The bar chart above  
Never indicate an image position to help you avoid any referencing errors. Always assume that the reader does not see the image. Use vivid imagery to describe the measurement instead. What kind is it? How is it divided? Are color codes involved?These can all help create an enhanced imagined image descriptor.  
  
A task 2 essay utilizes summarized comparison and data points within 3-5 paragraphs. This essay is a confusing 5 paragraph presentation. The increased paragraph number did not help deliver a clearer explanation of the image data. The confusing writing skill that made the paragraphs difficult to decypher became more evident instead. Focus on understandability of information based on clearer writing styles next time. The biggest failing point of the writer is in the C + C section.
## FISH AND MEAT CONSUMPTION

  
  
The line chart compares the demand for 4 different types of meat and fish in a European country over the period between 1979 and 2004.  
  
It can be seen clearly from the chart that the overall trend was downward, as the level of consumption for three of four types dropped during the period shown, at different rates. In particular, there were dramatic decreases for lamb and beef, while fish saw a comparatively slight drop. By contrast, the demand for chicken boomed, going from 3rd to the highest at the end of the period.  
  
The consumption of beef began the period with the highest, at over 220 grams per person per week. In 1984, it stayed at almost the previous same amount, after experiencing several periods of solid up and down. The figure dramatically dropped and hit its trough in 1999 (100 grams per person per week), before recovering gradually to over 120 grams at the end of the period. In contrast, chicken started in the 3rd place, with the weekly amount of 140 grams per person, but rosed remarkably and hit its peak at over 260 grams in 2002. Its demand then fell moderately until finished up in 2004 with the highest consumed level of 250 grams.  
  
Turning to lamb, a citizen in the country ate over 150 grams of lamb per week in 1979, but the demand decreased by 30% after 20 years to about 60 grams. It then ended the period at the same amount. Similarly, fish consumption slightly decreased from 70 to 50 grams in the first 3 years before stalling at around 50 grams until the end of the period.  
  
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A task 1 essay is just a simple summary and report presentation. It should be completed in no more than 200 words. The writing time allowand is only 20 minutes. The way this presentation was completed will need 40 minutes to complete. The analysis cannot be finished within the actual time setting. The writing -tries too hard to be intricate. Relying on the over-writing to make up for logic and analysis. Exaggerated term usage takes the place of a straightforward report. Emotional presentations work only in the opinion based task 2 essays.  
  
The writer has a pretty good report somewhere in this essay. He just tends to unnecessarily expand the presentation, without time limit considerations, which is a mistake.
@Holt  
Thank you very much! I have combined my writing style from many sources, and I've always tried to take all good points from their report so sometimes I feel overwhelmed with that, it's a mistake I wish I could improve. Btw, thanks for your advice, I'll consider it carefully  
  
@greencoconut  
Thank you very much! I really appreciate the sentences you gave, they seem to be simple and logical, which are all I need and try to practice every day, I've always tried to make my report more complicated. Hope I can improve that!
## waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015

  
  
A glance at the chart provided reveals how much waste was collected by a recycling centre over a period of 5 consecutive years between 2011 and 2015  
  
Overall , It is evident that the total amount of waste collected only fluctuated slightly throughout the period . Furthermore , paper was the most collected type of recyclable waste , the opposite was true for garden waste .  
  
In 2011 , the figure for paper waste was approximately under 60 tons , whereas the garden waste was just over 32 tons . Meanwhile , there was about 48 tons of glass was gathered which was higher roughly 13 tons in comparison with the amount of tins waste .  
  
The period from 2011 to 2013 witnessed a moderate decline in the amount of paper wasted which made this figure hit the lowest point of 40 tons , then rising rapidly to 70 tons in the year 2015 . During the same time , the figure of other waste fluctuated marginal , then stood at over 50 tons of glass , approximately 40 tons of tins and 35 tons of garden waste .  
  
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The presentation is mostly acceptable except, the writer did not proofread the report. There is a missing period at the end of one paragraph. This created an open ended and confusing summary to the reader, who is expecting more information since the end signal for the sentence/ paragraph is not there.  
  
There should not be a space between the last word and punctuation mack in the sentences either. This is a simple formatting problem that you should have learned about when writing school reports and essays.  
  
Being a newbie, you show the potential to pass this task with a high scare. You need proper guidance to achieve that. More practice essays with proper corrections can help you achieve that.
## concentrate on one job or switching to another

  
  
Switching goes has become a matter of contention. Regarding this matter, some individuals opinie that altering a career annually is of immense benefit whilst others counter this view. Personally, I agree with the latter claim. ;  
  
One the one hand, the two main advantages of job-hopping is providing more experiences and expanding the social sphere. The first noticeable merit of this is people can experience various careers. As a result, they can extend the horizon in numerous fields. Another pronounced benefit is enlarging social circles. People do many different jobs whereby they strike up new relationships with new colleagues. Therefore, this offers manifold benefits to their business and life  
  
On the other hand, switching jobs periodically entails some disadvantages such as the lack of seniority and difficulty in training Students to manage in various fields. One note-worthy downside is there are no professionals for a job. Consequently, a number of factories and offices do not resolve complex problems and produce better productions. Another Pronounced drawback is a daunting task for universities to teach students who want to do many jobs. It means that a amount of knowledge in many careers must be taught and learn. This is a formidable challenge for numerous students and teachers  
  
In conclusion, I hold a firm belief that the benefits of this trend pale in comparison to draw buchs. I opine that people should I concentrate on one job to expert at it.
The first few errors that caught my eye in the first paragraph are the LR and GRA mistakes. she writer obviously did not review his presentation otherwise, he would have seen and corrected the errors:  
  
goes= jobs  
  
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The semi-colon is not needed. Use only one punctuation mack at a time. You cannot use emojis in formal academic wiring.  
  
I agree with the latter claim.  
Since you agree with the latter claim, you should be explaining why you are convinced why your point of view is correct. By using a comparison discussion that proves both sides to be correct, your solo opinion is now incorrect and without merit. Present the other point of view only to explain how it supports your opinion. That creates 2 supporting ideas that fully develops your point of view. There will be no scores applied to opposing point of view supporting arguements.
You are not writing a mesearch paper. You are writing a personal opinion paper of no more than 300 words. I bet you did not even time your writing to be completed within the 40 minute time frame. The prompt paraphrase it inconsistent with the original presentation in the sense that the discussion foundation for the topic has changed and the response is not based on the indicated response format. It changed from A V. D to a definition essay for a gap year. It is a complete restatement and opinion paragraph failure.  
  
Why is there a whole paragraph dedicated to an explanation about what a gap year is? That is not a discussion requirement that resulted in a nol-scoring discussion paragraph and discussion deviation. Discuss only as instructed or you fail the test. There is no other way to put it. Though the essay is long well developed, it will fail because it addresses anincorrect prompt. It does not deliver the discussion requirements as needed. Review the task 2 samples here to geta better idea of how to properly approach the essay.
## female's participation in sports

  
  
***The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared with the percentage of people who watched them in 2000.***  
  
The bar chart compared the figure for 16-25 year-old female's participation in sports and the percentage of its audience in 2000.  
Overall, it can be seen that tennis and basketball were two most popular areas for both participants and watchers. Also notably, there were more people playing badminton and golf than those watching these activities.  
  
Regarding tennis, 60% individuals watched this sport in 2000, which doubled the percentage of females participating in it. This was also the same percentage for golf takers, while there was only 10% people spending time watching it. Interestingly, the figure for basketball female players and viewers was almost similar, ranging from 50% to 55%.  
  
Turning to horse riding and racing, the percentage of females aged 16-25 taking part in was the lowest, at less than 5%. It can also be seen that there were fewer females joining gymnastics than those following this sport, with nearly 10% registered. Conversely, more women played badminton than those watching it, but the difference was only about 5%.  
  
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For the summary overview. the proper approach would have been to describe itas a comparison of players vessels watchers.That is because an analysis of the graph shows a ratio percentage rather than a percentage alone. Why is it a ratio percentage? Look at the bar images side by side, the number of players is always listed along with the viewers. That presentation made this is a ratio comparison report.  
  
You do not need to constantly remind the readers that the report is based on the female gender since there is only one sex represented in the image. However, a gentle reminder once in a while won't hurt. Just remember to use alternative references for female to remove the monotony and improve your LR score.