dim/essayforum_raw_writing_10k huggingface dataset:
Hi Rosa..  
It is a good job because this is free of major mistakes. However, you have to remember that you should manage the number of words in each sentence. Do not be really teeming. These below are other suggestions.  
  
... about how a journey IS able to deliver a great ...  
He believes that ~~a travel done by~~ tourists ~~which~~ WHO HAVE CONDUCTED A TRAVEL leave their native (...) that they never visit ~~before~~ PREVIOUSLY and discover (...) that country~~,~~.(you need the period here) THEY DO A LARGE NUMBER ACTIVITIES THERE SUCH AS connectIN with people, mak~~e~~ ING a relationship with (...) and uncoverING everything that cannot ...  
  
... a perfect way~~,~~ to travel~~,~~ AND create a sustainable tourism and ~~a sustainable~~ way of connecting ...  
..., then a case ~~which~~ occurred to my brother ...  
... arrested after HE been suspected as ~~the~~ a doer who throwS the stone, ...  
... left the prison WHEN he was weak and passed ...  
I dedicate myself to conduct ~~a~~ THE sustainable tourism which ...
Countries, nowadays, face remarkable enhances on the urban areas and economic achievement but they are vulnerable to overcome the impact of environmental destruction from the cities' development. Society need to undertake the two fundamental transformations for the next better centuries.  
  
First and foremost, basic structure of changing in economic society should be considered as a necessity because energy and gasses consumption will be doubled in the next hundred years. Following that, public must pay attention into the cities, energy, and land management in order to transform a fine relationship between human being with the planet.  
  
The second transformation, people must succeed low carbon economy in the next two decades. Mega-cities should be designed in compact way to diminish energy consumption, business trend should be innovated into renewable investment, and transportation modes should be altered into non-polluting ways by reducing, reusing and recycling all sorts of things together with an array of communities.  
  
To convert those means effectively needs supports from all components from government officials to the citizenries to centre attention which can deliver a better growth of the climate world.
hallo rizal  
there are few suggestion for you  
  
Countries~~, nowadays,~~ face remarkable enhances (...) economic achievement,nowadays , but they are vulnerableS to overcome the impact ...  
  
~~Following that~~ , (NOT ONLY ABOVE, BUT,) public must pay attention into ...  
  
transform a ~~fine~~(GOOD/KIND/BEST) relationship between(FOLLOWING S AND S) human being with the planet.  
  
people must ~~succeed low~~REDUCE carbon economy in the ~~next~~ two decades LATTER .
**The jobs we will lose to machines-and the ones we want not**  
  
Anthony Goldbloom, Machine learning expert shared of his experience in TED channel. He argued that machine has changed people live which it not only able to task simple things but many applications. Machines are utilized in industry and academia such as data operating, cooking, game, data sharing, grading essay and disease testing. Simply, machine capable to operate many things in every situation. This hard to imagine that machine was able like human do. However, machine was brought some negative impact in people live. Online crime, credit card hacking as two of many effects caused by using machine. In this situation, people should be aware about growth of modern technology. As a result, with the globalization era, machine has responsible to change of human condition.  
  
Source: TED
Hi Mr Patta.  
These below are my correction to finalize yours.  
  
Anthony Goldbloom, AN EXPERT OF Machine learning ~~expert~~ shared ~~of~~ his experience in TED channel. He argued that THE machine has changed THE LIFE OF people ~~live~~ which it not only able to ~~task~~ MAKE ~~simple~~ things SIMPLER but NEEDS many applications. THE Machines are utilized in AN industry and academia such as ~~data~~ operating DATA, cooking, PLAYING game, ~~data~~ sharing DATA, grading essay and ~~disease~~ testing A DISEASE. Simply, THE machine IS ~~capable~~ ABLE to operate many ...  
  
... machine was able TO DO like human doING. However, THE machine ~~was~~~~brought~~ BRINGS some negative impactS in THE people'S LIFE ~~live~~ .  
... effects caused by using THE machine.  
... people should be MORE aware about A growth of THE modern technology.  
... the globalization era, THE machine has responsible to ...  
  
OVERALL, IT IS A GOOD JOB
Hi PHA  
Let me give you some correction  
  
... learning expert shared ~~of~~ his experience in TED channel.  
... it not only able to ~~task~~(do) simple things (task) but many applications. Machines are ~~utilized~~(utilised) in industry and ~~academia~~(academic) such as data operating ...  
  
Simply,(a) machine capable to ...  
... people should be aware ~~about~~of growth of modern technology.  
  
Thank you...
Hello,  
Here some inputs for you.  
  
Anthony Goldbloom, **a** Machine learning expert shared ~~of~~ his experience in TED channel.  
... machine has changed **the live of** people ~~live~~ which it not only able to **make** task **more** simple ~~things~~ but **need** many applications.  
Simply, machine **is**~~cap~~ able to operate many ...  
However, machine ~~was brought~~**brings** some negative impact in people ~~live~~**'s life** .  
... the globalization era, **the** machine has responsible to ...  
  
**Good Luck!**
**The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?**  
  
Enormous number of people believe that the internet has been imposing people to give and take an information. Surprisingly, there are large number of negative impact for the human being. However, the society can take steps to address such drawbacks. These problems and solutions will be obviously explained in paragraphs below.  
  
Surfing in the internet is a phenomenon that brings great convenience and efficiency. But, there are some potensial risks that presented by this phenomenon. Firstly, social media involves personal information that most people enable to see. If the user carelessness, anyone can have access to that information. Secondly, it is obvious that there is a sharp rise in the number of cyber crimes. More and more ciber crimes such as human selling and prostitutions are committed via the internet. It is well-known as ciber crime, for example, recently there is a accident that someone was hacked a billboard to show unpleasant content in south Jakarta. Finally, an internet-addicted person tend to be isolated, self-centered and unsociable. They have no much time to make a face-to-face communication.  
  
To answer the problem in previous part, there are three sollutions that might solve the problems. From government side, the authority can make a regulation to inhibit demerit of this strugle condition like a rule that give maximum punishment to suspect of ciber crime. Next, the drawback of internet can be reduced by combination between government and technology. It could be a center office that authority possessed. It can inspect the user that potentional to do an illegal movement on the virtual world. But apart of previous sollutions, education is a vital aspect to minimize the disastrous effect of internet. People that using internet have to know what the benefits of internet that can help and what the drawbacks that can degradate their life.  
  
To recapitulate, government, technology and education have essential role to deal with decreasing effect of using internet.
Dear writer, allow me to give opinion.  
  
... large number of negative impacts for the human being. However, the society can take some possible steps to address such drawbacks.  
  
... potensial risks that are**presented**(caused) by this phenomenon.  
... most people enable to see it . If the user is careless~~ness~~, anyone can have access to that information (in my view better if you explain little bit about why if someone else uses the information such as if the user is careless, potentially someone else will be able to use his or her personal information irresponsibly like hacking the credit card and so on) .  
  
Secondly, it is obvious that there is a sharp rise [...] time to make a face-to-face communication. (I think that this part should be clear more, you have to make sure what are the examples of cyber crimes. In my view, human selling (human trafficking ) is not a cyber crime, it should be that crime uses the Internet in an effort to persuade the prospective clients )  
  
====)))) In conclusion, from my point of view, it is better if you create longer (ideally, 3 sentences)  
  
overall, I love reading your writing. It is interisting. Keep writing and do not give up.  
Regards,  
  
Matareng!!!!!!!
Dear writer  
  
Surfing in the internet is a phenomenon that brings great ...  
But, there are some ~~potensial~~ (potential) risks that presented by this phenomenon -> Personally , the alternative vocabulary could provide more efficient discription to improve your band  
  
More and more ~~ciber~~ (cyber) crimes such as human ...  
  
recently there is a accident that someone ~~was~~ hacked a billboard to show ...  
  
Some word shuold be replaced by some academic vocabularies if you want to raise your band and minimize the grammatical errors  
  
Regards
Hello Brother  
Let me give you some advices  
  
Surprisingly, there are large number of negativeimpact >> of negative impacts  
  
But, there are some potensial >>but, there are some potentials  
  
If the user carelessness >>if the user are carelessness  
  
there are three sollutions >> there are three solutions  
  
It could be a center office that authority possessed >>they can create special institution which has authority to monitor users' activities  
  
keep writing
Hi Mathew, as I go through the essay, I must say you have a well managed essay and it is quiet long for the task at hand, however, what I need you to focus on in creating or writing is the words that you associate in your sentences. Makes sure that you ,incorporate words that are easy to comprehend, believe me, reading an essay and understanding it is already a task to overcome and if you couple this with words that are completely out of the ordinary or something that the readers has to look up to get the meaning and understand it.  
  
What I'm trying to say is, you don't necessarily have to put or include words that are not the usual, though, it's not bad to experiment but it will still be great and advisable to stick to the usual words in order to convey the message you are trying to get to your readers.  
  
I hope the insights help and should you need further information, do let us know so we can assist you further, I believe you are able to address the prompt and managed to have a well rounded essay and with the remarks and suggestions above, I hope your revision is a lot stronger than the original one.
**How to Use Google to Plan Your Trip**  
  
Google Inc. created Google Trips to revolutionize the previous apps which is Google maps. It is a personalized tour guide in your pocket, it aims to help travelers planning the trips. The application is very user friendly. After setting up the app using your Gmail account, you can plan your first trip. Afterwards, it has six predominant characteristics such as reservations, things to do, saved places, day plans, food & drink and getting around.  
  
Firstly, reservation shows you the flight, hotel and car rental information and then collected into your account. Secondly, things to do recommend travelers to attractive destination divided into several specifications. Thirdly, day plans help arranging itineraries. Fourthly, food & drink gives you basic information regarding traditional dishes. Finally, getting around are categorized to provide transportation information included the costs.
Hi Lincoln..  
These below are my thoughts for your summary. I firmly hope these can help to finalize yours.  
  
... revolutionize the previous apps ~~which is~~ NAMELY Google maps.  
... tour guide in ~~your~~ A pocket~~, it~~AND aims to help travelers planning ~~the~~ THEIR trips. The application is very user- Friendly. After setting up the app WITH using your Gmail ...  
  
Afterward~~s~~ , it has six predominant ...  
  
Firstly, reservation shows ~~you~~ THE TRAVELLERS the flight, A hotel and car (...) collected into ~~your~~ THEIR account.  
Thirdly, ~~day plans~~ PLANNING DAYS help ~~arranging~~ TO ARRANGE itineraries. Fourthly, food & drink APPLICATION gives ~~you~~ THE HOLIDAY MAKERS THE basic information ...  
... categorized to provide THE transportation information includ~~ed~~ ING the costs.  
  
Note: You are supposed to distinguish when using gerund and to infinitive.
Hi Lincoln, I would like to share a few insights for your essay.  
  
- travelers planning their trips.  
- After setting it up,  
- predominant ~~characteristics~~features such  
  
- First~~ly~~ , reservation shows you the flight,  
- and then collect~~ed~~it into your account.  
- ~~Secondly~~Next , " things to do" is recommendedto travelers  
- ~~to~~and attractive destination  
- ~~Thirdly~~Last but not the least , day plans help  
- ~~arranging~~arrange itineraries~~. Fourthly,~~with food & drink it gives you basic  
- ~~Finally, getting~~Getting around are categorized to  
- information ~~included~~including the costs.  
  
There you have it Lincoln, I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and for future writing reference, mind the usage as well as the placement of your words as they make up the sentences.
Using the Internet is the means used to share information and exchange data more easily, but also can cause problems.  
Firstly, the internet as a way of information can be used as suggestions of fraud on the Internet that can harm the user internet. For instance, sales mode online that sells not accordance with goods.  
  
Secondly, the Internet can cause dependence to lose track of time in his life. For example, if someone is addicted to social media and online gaming, if the day just does not use the internet for sure they feel something is missing in their lives.  
  
Finally, Internet usage can cause health problems to the wearer. This disruption caused by the device used by the user. Computers are a lot of benefit in many ways. Some people even become like to linger in front of the computer. However, this turned out to be a case of behavior can cause side effects. Some users complained of pain in certain body parts, just as pain in the hands, arms, shoulders, neck, and back, or fatigue on the eyes.  
  
The solution to overcoming these problems are: The first, The need for law enforcement with the establishment of internet police are responsible for determining the standard control operation and application of information technology. The second must be able to set the time between being in front of a computer or playing games with the portion of learning and rest, and the last is more able to maintain health while using the Internet for health more than anything.
Hello  
You have a good summary  
I have some corrections  
  
Using the Internet is ~~the~~ means used to share information ...  
For instance, sales mode online that *sells*~~not accordance with goods~~ .  
  
Some users ~~complained of~~ feel pain in **the**certain **of**body parts, ~~just as~~ which are pain...  
... The first, ~~The~~ need for law enforcement with the ...  
... while using the Internet for health *more than anything*.  
  
You have explain the ***Computers are a lot of benefit in many ways*** clearly and totally.  
You can added introduction in the first paragraph. there is repetition like first, second and the last you can use another words.
Hi Pandai, running through your essay, I must say that you have made a very clear view of your points, points that are worth considering in todays situation when it comes to the usage of the internet, I for one believe that, one must think before they click, once you've done it, you can only delete it, but it will be forever in the world wide web. Pretty much, what I'm saying is, having the power to get connected to almost everyone in the world is a huge responsibility, a responsibility where everybody needs to take caution and respect for ones privacy and right of space.  
  
Now, I do have a few notes you might want to consider in your revision.  
  
- ~~but~~however, it also can cause problems.  
- First~~ly~~ , the internet, as a way of  
- gathering information can be used  
- that can harm the user ~~internet~~ .  
- For instance, sales ~~mode~~ online that sells  
- ~~not accordance with~~faulty goods and advertising .  
  
- Second~~ly~~ , the Internet can cause dependence  
- ~~to~~and one can lose track of time ~~in his life~~( this phrase is not necessary for this particular sentence .  
- ~~if~~ the day ~~just does not use~~will come that they loose~~the~~ internet connection and for sure  
  
There you have it Pandai, I hope the above remarks help and I left the rest of the essay so you will be able to practice editing yourself by following through the one above.
A top Russian diplomat said that the cybersecurity hazards are the vital problem for International citizen and it needs a strongest intergovernmental cooperation to overcome the entire problem in this age. To increase the cooperation between authorities also become an attention for Mikhail Y. Galuzin as a Russian Ambassador to Indonesia. He said that government has to take a part to tackle the increasing number of terrorism. Galuzin clarified about the raised amount of utilizing the internet like a social media, terrorism and all activities that related to communicating with other terror agents. Unfortunately, the internet and other cyber technologies have been used continuously by terrorist and all organised crimes in different activities. Come up with this reason, all part of authority should take a strike action to combat and destroy the endeavour of terrorism activities. Indonesia and Russia coincide to enhance cooperation, especially in cybersecurity, following bilateral consultation on strategic stability between two countries to led political coordinating.
Hi Ibal.  
I am delighted to read your summary because you have shown the better progress. One having to be remembered is making you sure that what you write is what you mind. Sometimes, there actually need a gerund, but you place TO INFINITIVE. please, meet my notes and deal with them  
  
A top ~~Russian~~ diplomat said (...) for International citizenS,(Don't forget putting a comma if those have different subjects) and it needs a ...  
~~To increase~~ INCREASING the cooperation between ...  
He said that THE government has to take a part to tackle ~~the increasing~~ A RISE FOR THE number of terrorismS.  
... used continuously by terroristS and all organised ...  
... action to combat and destroy the ~~endeavour of~~ terrorism activities.  
  
OVERALL, IT IS A GOOD JOB
**Relationship in workplace (Writing task II)**  
  
The presented pie charts give information about the comparison of relationship between workers and their supervisor, and workers among their colleagues from 2005 to 2009. It is clarly seen that the most of the employees feel the exellent relationship with their co-workers than their career leader over four years.  
  
Between 2005 and 2009, employees who stated had a very good relation with their fellow workers increased from 63% to 70 %. Good relationship that was felt by them decresed 3 % from it's percentage in 2005. Next, fair connection showed 7 % in 2005, but it declined to 3 % in 2009. The workers who had no colleagues rose 1 % and who associated poorly with their work partners was not found in 2009.  
  
On the other hand, the relation between workers and their supervisor showed an absolutely great relation was 61 % in 2005 and it had risen 4 % by 2009. Good relation that was experienced by only 26 % of employees in 2005, and it dipped to 22 % in 2009. Then, fair connection with the executive had decreased 2 % by the end of 2009, and poor relationship was remain unchanged. The last, the workers who did not have supervisor jumped from 1 % to 4 % over four years.  
  
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hello there ...  
Let me give some correction for you..  
  
these are some mistakes of spelling in your writing and grammatical error.  
  
It is clarly*(Clearly)* seen  
the exellent*( excellent)*relationship  
The presented pie charts  
and who*( do not need to put who again because it has been already in your sentence)* associated poorly with their work partners was not found in 2009  
  
Good relation that was*(has)* experienced by only 26 %  
  
Those are some correction for me. I do hope that it can help your writing.  
sorry if i make mistakes in my correction..  
  
good job....
Hello,  
here some inputs for you  
  
The ~~presented~~ pie charts **present**~~give information~~ about the comparison of ...  
**Overall,** It is ~~clarly~~*clearly* seen that (...) feel the ~~exellent~~*excellent* relationship with their ...  
  
... was felt by them ~~decresed~~**decreased** 3% from it's percentage in 2005.  
  
**Good Luck!**
**The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?**  
  
Majority people believe that the internet has been imposing people to change the way of transferring information. Surprisingly, it carries a large number of negative consequences for the human being. However, the society can take steps to address such drawbacks. These problems and solutions will be obviously explained in paragraphs below.  
  
The internet brings various negative impacts. Firstly, inappropriate contents such pornographic, crime and deception are easily accessed by everyone, including children. Adolescence is susceptible to negative contents as well as they will behave based on provided information on the internet. For example: in 2015, Abraham Limau had conducted research revealed that nearly 75% of rape victims are pornography addictive. Consequently, they did sexual violence to accommodate their desire. Secondly, lack of direct communication. Since society spends more time interacting with each other online. Indeed, they have less face-to-face communication. Therefore, the internet could be obstacle family life.  
  
Apart from previous explanations, several approaches could be the solution to overcome such phenomenon. The first, the government has authority to create a set of restriction to ban the websites contains adult and violence subjects and form strict punishment in order people obey the regulation. The second, schools have crucial roles in educating students to use internet in the appropriate way and utilize the technology only to search new knowledge and data for their future career. The third, family is required to monitor their children' activities during the use of the internet, to prevent them access inappropriate websites.  
  
It could be concluded that the internet has vast problems for society, particularly children. However, these could be diminished by working side by side between family, government, and school.
Majority of people  
  
~~large~~huge numbers of negatives  
  
These problems and solutions will be obviously explained in paragraphs below. - i don't think this sentence is particularly good - it's better to pur the arguments in the exposition.  
  
obstacle family life. --- for the family life  
  
Also, at the end of paragraph 2 - you can just combine some of the sentences - i feel like they are too short.  
  
... that the internet ~~has~~creates vast problems for ...  
  
I think, that they are several phrases, which need correction - but i doubt my level is good enough to adjust them into your essay.