Whether you are taking the pencil or CBT test, it is always better for you to stick to the 275-290 word allowance. That is because the focus of the examiner is not on the number of words that you are writing but rather, on the proper use of vocabulary, clarity of your explanations, and your skill in forming proper English sentences. Based on my assessment of your work, you failed to deliver on the required elements and over delivered on the word count. You are focusing on the incorrect aspect of Task 2 writing.  
  
For starters, you developed an incorrect response to the given discussion question:  
  
DI: To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?  
Response: in my opinion, indeed, some old opinions are still working for now, but with the era changing, new ideas for modern life should not be neglected either.  
  
The appropriate response would have been to provide a weighted argument based on either a support or non support of the given discussion topic. Your total essay showed that you were not capable of delivering a clear opinion and defending it within the 2 reasoning paragraphs. Perhaps you are not familiar with the discussion approaches within the task 2 essays? This particular essay requires you to deliver an emotional response to the given question. Use a creative way of delivering the strength of your support or opposition to the given topic. You have to deliver a clear point of view otherwise, your TA score will be in the lower scoring bracket. You have an incorrect approach to the given discussion topic and question.  
  
Take a position, defend it using reasoning and examples within 2 separate topic paragraphs. That is how the reasoning portion of the essay should have been presented. The defense of your point of view is all that matters in singular opinion essays such as these. Convince the examiner that your point of view is believable. It doesn't need to be correct, there are no right or wrong answers here. There is only a reference to your personal point of view.  
  
Based on your writing errors, it appears that you forgot to double check your paper for errors prior to submission. So based on the additional errors, I do not see you passing this test with this kind of writing.  
  
Spelling errors:  
conservating (wrong vocabulary) - conservative (traditional beliefs or thinking)  
examplar - example  
bout - about (... express discrimination About identities...)  
  
(These errors could have easily been caught through proof-reading\_  
  
Grammar:  
.. was criticised and the couple sued (requires a comma between clauses) - was criticised, and the couple....  
  
Avoid using contractions in academic writing because it affects the formality of the written presentation:  
What's - What is  
That's - That is  
  
Punctuation Conventions:  
Comma usage for clarity before the word "and": ... women, children , and occupations .../ identities, salaries, and classes... / ... freedom, diversity, and creative ...  
  
Never forget to double check the content of your essay. Be eagle eyed in reference to:  
- Spelling errors  
- Punctuation errors  
- Prompt responsiveness  
- Proper paraphrasing with a minimum of 3 sentences in the introduction and concluding paragraphs