Evening star., 1928-03-18
SCREEN

! menC OF IL, out ltle story Is IOiu
in too Sketchy manner.
There are latent possibilities for
pathoS. romance and drama in
the story, but as you have told 1t,
most of this material Is sub
merged and 1t becomes only re-
lation of events or happenings. It
needs to be elaborated, the dra-
matte highlights need pointing
up. the big moments should be
stressed and some bits of charac-
terization worked in in order to
make the characters more human.
We feel you will find 1t to your
best interests to permit us to
serve you in making a complete
revision of your story. This
means one of our experts will take
your material and without dis
turbing the meritoriouS parts OF
the general plot. outline or chal-
/ acterization, rewrite it into ap-
proved form. build up the weak
spots and, wherever possible. add
TO the dramatic intenSity-in
short, give it the polish so indie
ative of the master craftsman
the finishing touches which make
I a producer reach for his cheek
book. Have no fear that we will
mutilate or diSfigure the story in
! such a way that you might fail to
recognize your own brain-child.
- We trust you will avail your
self of this splendid opportunity.
I to enter a most fascinating and
I lucrative profeSSion-the writing
of photoplays. Sign and return
the enclosed application with
your remittance and one Of our
staff of trained writer's will inn
nediately proceed with the re-
vision of the story. For S35 we
] revise the manuscript anG attend
, to your copyright. Remit by post
Office or express money older,
bank draft or certified check. Do
not send personal check"
/ This is one angle to a game
which numbers its victims by the
thousand. No definite promise is
made TO sell the scenario and the
S35 is supposed TO be paid for a
revision. Of the four manuscripts
submitted by Oscar, only one vas
held. After the revision, accord
ing TO agreement the company IS
authorized to sell the story
through our sales department to
80 hest advantage" but no prom
ise is made of its eventual dis
posal to producing company.
It is q greet game!
MARION DAVIES, who has been
III working in a new picture, not
yet titled, under the direction OF
King Vidor. will have Robert Z.
Leonard as director when she as
cunes the leading role in Her
Cardboard Lover" which has been
selected as her next starting We
hicle for Metro Goldwyn- Mayer.
*%
MRS. RELLA ABELL ARM
III STRONG of Annapolis Roads,
Md, widow of Paul Armstrong,
wi,o has attained celebrity on the
stage and in screen work. has
written to The Star and incloSed
a copy of a communication which
she recently sent the editor If
TIE Motion Picture Classic regard
ing the alleged claims of Wilson
Miner that he collaborated with
Paul Armstrong in writing Alias
Jimmy Valentine" In part, Mrs.
Armstrong says:
"In justice TO the memory OF n
great playwright, must call your
attention to an attempt by Wilson
Miner to detract from the credit
and impair the reputation OF my
husband, Paul Armstrong. Jimmy
Valentine was written long be-
fore Mr.. Armstrong knew Miner.
Il was written at Annapolis
Roads. once the family estate,
when Mr.. Armstrong spent one
week on the play. George G. Ty-
Ter presented it with H. B. War
ner and it then ran for 10 years
n five different countries. estab-
. fishing a record at that time.
1T was also at the Annapolis
Roads house that Paul Armstrong
r'rote 'Salome Jane in three days.
The one real collaboration with
paul Armstrong was Rex Beach.
who helped on the play Going
Some"
CTUDIO AND SCREEN: James
- Cruze, director Of such pro-
ductions as The Covered Wagon"
and "Old Ironsides." has been
signed by Metro Goldwyn- Mayer
| TO direct Excess Baggage" mex
starring vehicle for William
Haines. The latter Is now work
I ing in a story Of newspaper life,
He Learned About Women"
/ o. P. Heggie. we'll known on the
| American stage, has decided To
! keep away from the movies. He
/ completed one Of the feature
| roles In THE Actress" with Nor
ma Shearer, and then decided he
was through with the pictures
! "Delectives" Is the starring We
I hic1e for Kari Dane and George
, X. Arthur. It is said 10 be bur
/ lcsque on the typical mystery
story. Marce!ine Day has the
feminine lead.
OF the 45 pictures censored In
! Cern.s ny during January. % were
made in America. Eighteen were
! German made.
I TnA Br0Yai'9". director OF the
! Lon CLANCY pictures. has returned
/ flc'a abro"d where ne selected
backgrounds for a CLANCY picture
- ca has .1ot been named
c0rinnc Griffith has completed
her United Artists picture The
Garden of Eden" and IT. viii be
ready for showing soon. Charles
Ray. Who was once an tndcpend-
. o",f Dr0fucer. appears in support
u the star, and others in the cast