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Evidence: safety is a big and important concern when it comes to driving. Manufacturers are working every year to make these cars more independent and safe to drive. Improvements in these cars include sensor improvement, computer hardware and software to make the care saftier and more independent. As technology keeps growing these cars are being equipped with all these new sensors, cameras, and computers that improve the car's system and ability to drive independently.

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