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Evidence: Simplified electronics made of silicon carbide have been tested in a chamber simulating the chaos of Venus's surface and have lasted for three weks in such conditions. Another way they are tying to study Venus is with old technology called mechanical computers. modern computers are enormously powerful, flexable, and quick, but tend to be more delicate when it comes out to extreme physical conditions. exposing a type technology like a phone or a tablet to acid or heat is capable of melting tin. By comparison, systems that use mechnical parts can be mmade more resistant to pressure, heat, and other forces.

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