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Concluding Statement: This is my opinion on the software. I think that it is useless. It really is something that is happening now in this world is that technology is taking over us and what we do. We barley use our brains to study or read over something because we use the internet for that. We don't play outside or even try to look at new things in the world because were distacted by our phones or the tv. Most people are barley active and decide just to lay around and look at a screen. Now this is another thing less for a person to worry about, and slowly things that we are capable of doing by ourselves and using our head wouldn't be neccary because there's a sofware to that for us. Artist express themselves in art and they want people to figure it out and admire their painting, not a software to tell us. We become intelligent more each day if we use our head and take time to think about and thats something that is good for the people.

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