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Evidence: Although the danger of having such high temperatures around 170 degrees Fahrenheit the air pressure is around the same as Earth's. The text states, "At thirty-plus miles above the surface, temperatures would still be toasty at around 170 degrees Fahrenheit, but the air pressure would be close to that of sea level on Earth." This shows the air pressure would be subseptable for a human to land and be able to breathe. With the right spacecraft the temperatures can be avoided and would not be an issue.

Score: 1