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Evidence: The usage of vehicles are a double-edged sword. They may get us to where we need to go with plenty of time to spare, but what are we really loosing because of it? What we are loosing is the environment and also our health. In Paris, the pollution rate almost reached a new record high, thus forcing the partial driving pan to clear the air of the global city. In the article, "Paris bans driving due to smog", its evident that cars hurt us in more ways then we realize. Buisnesses are suffering due to the lack of transportaion avaliable to delivery their services as seen in source number two, "Delivery companies complained of lost revenue". "Congestion was down 60% in the capital of france after five-days of intesifying smog..." The smog was so dense that Paris officials created a law making even-numbered license plates to leave there cars at home to reduce pollution.

Score: 2