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On earth there are so many things to do like go running, hiking, going to the

beach,etc. But some of those things may be rsiky or sometimes they won't it just depends on what you do. Likewise on Venus, there are limits to things you can and cannot do.

Going to Venus doesn't always have risk. For example, simplified electronics that are made up of silicon carbide have been tested.Computers were very helpful for calculations by using gears and levers.If you had sent a cell phone or a laptop into acid it meltf in a matter of seconds.

If scientists really wanted to study Venus very well, they would need to go personally to despite the risks.Instead of just researching and gettting information from other people. Some of that information that you have received from others or the searching the web ,may be false facts.

Humans have sent tons of spacecrafts to land on Venus. "Each previous mission was unmanned,and for good reason,since no spacecraft survived the landng for more than a few hours ." On this planet it is over 800 degrees Fahrenheit and the atmospheric pressure is 90 times great than what we deal with on our planet, Earth.Almost 96 percent of carbon dioxide covers Venus.

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