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Yes, I strongly think it will be valuable to use in a class room. It could help improve assignements for kids or even improve education. It could even help the teachers out to figure out what students are bored of the same work.

The "Making Mona Lisa Smile" teachnology would be a great benifit in education. It could recognize "what students are becoming confused or bored." "Then it could modify the lesson, like an effective human instructor." If they could get it into schools it could improve the education for kids. Or even improve all schools graduation rate. The students would be more into doing assignements, completing homework, just by knowing if they werent into the work they had to do the computor could change it up for them.

If the education improved for future student that could lead to a better futre, better invintions. When students a bored about an assignement the computer would change it and make it more effective for the student to learn. More homework would be turned in, more assignements would be complete, school grades would go up, and the graduation rate would be way higher. And all that could be done by just changing somethings in computers.

Score: 2