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The National Aeronautics and Space Administration(NASA) hope to visit Venus and make a closer look to the ground. We often called Veus as Earth's twin cause is the closest planet to Earth in terms of density and size, and occasionally the closest in distance too.According to the text "Astronomers are fascinated by Venus because it may well once have been the most Earth-like planet in our solar system. Long ago, Venus was probably covered largely with oceans and could have supported various forms of life, just like Earth." NASA been wanting to visit Venus cause Venus is sometime right around the corner in space but every time they sent spacecraft to land on this cloud-draped world, no spacecraft survived the landing for more than a few hours.According to the text"On the planet's surface, temperatures average over 800 degrees Fahrenheit, and the atmospheric pressure is 90 time greater than what we experience on our own planet." This type of conditions are far more extreme than anything humas encounter on Earth. For example, Venus has the the hottest surface temperature of any planet in our solar sytem, even though Mercury is closer to our sun. NASA has been working on other way to study in Venus. they are even trying to bring back an old technology called mechanical computer, these devics make calculations by using gears and lever and do not require electronics at all unlike

today computers. According to the text "Some simplified electronics made of silicon carbide have been tested in a chamber simulating the chaos of Venus's surface and have lasted for three weeks in such conditions". As you see NASA are really trying to find another way to study there and how they are gonna live while they are in Venus.In conclusion,As you know NASA are doing everthing they can for a way to live and how they are gonna study the enivoments. If they keep on trying they are gonna be able to survie in that atmospheric, one day they are gonna make it to Venus.

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