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Venus, the hottest planet of the Solar System, can be cool but risky and dangerous for everyone. People want to be on this gaseous planet, but spacecrafts only live for an hour or so. It also couldn't hold fertile terrain and productivity of life due to the geothermal heat of Venus. Can the acheivement be fulfilled by studying the planet Venus? The author of

"The Challenge of Exploring Venus" points out that travelling to Venus would be a worthy pursuit despite of the dangerous conditions that is present. It is very achieveable because of recent experiments from scientists to investigate the conditions of Venus and to collect evidence from their investigations.

The ability of landing in Venus can be acheived by the studies that scientists try to experiment. Scientists have worked with this problem recently to innovate the possibilities of going to Venus and to make it work with ease. In paragraph 5 of "The Challenge of Exploring Venus" it clearly states," Just as our jet airplanes

travel at a higher altitude to fly over many storms, a vehicle hovering over Venus would avoid the unfriendlyground conditions by staying up and out of the way. At thirty-plus miles above the surface, temperatures would be still be toasty at around at 170 degrees Fahrenheit, but the air pressure would be plentiful, and radiation would not exceed Earth levels. Not easy conditions, but survivable for humans." This quote from the excerpt is telling that it would be hard to be in the Venus conditions but it is very survivable for people to see the massive terrains of Venus. That task is an endeavour but would still be achieved in the future.

The endeavour of being on the landmasses of Venus can be still achieved, not only by studying the investigations but also in collecting evidence. The people who work in NASA have been collecting data to see if people can survive on specific planets. One major example from the excerpt "The Challenge of Exploring Venus" on paragraph 7 claims," Modern computers are enormously powerful, flexible, and quick, but tend to be more delicate when it comes to extreme physical conditions. Just imagine exposing a cell phone or tablet to acid or heat capable of melting tin. By comparison, systems that use mechanical parts can be made more resistant to pressure, heat, and other forces." This textual information can solve the

accomplishment of going to Venus by testing different gears and parts that determines the out come of being on Venus.

Challenges can be made in days, weeks, months, and/or years. But it depends on the people the most. "The Challenge of Exploring Venus" tells the readers that accomplishing an impossible endeavour will be rewarding in the future. The passage tell readers that accomplishing the task can be worthwhile by learning from the endeavour, how to solve this situation, and what needs to be done in the future. This text can inspire kids to adults to learn that this task can be acheived in anyway or form. If this text helps the imagination of people to new roads of discovery, their chance can lead them on a great and adventurous path.

Score: 4