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On this essay, it will be explain how it's worthy to study the planet Venus, despite the dangers it presents for the human being and how it could be done.

Venus is often categorized as Earth's "twin" in terms of density and size, and often times closes in distance too. But whythe scientists are willing to take the risk to study Venus even though that it is dangerous? As the following passage says " Astronomers are facinated by Venus because it may well once have been the most Earth-like planet in out solar system. Long ago,Venus was probably covered largely with oceans and could have supported various forms of life, just like Earth. Today, Venus still has some features that are analogous to those on Earth. The planet as a surface of rocky sediment and includes familiar features such as valleys, mountains, and craters" (4) giving to the reader how long ago, Venus was and is the most Earth-like planet in the solar system.

The risk to goto Venus, are pretty big. "A thick atmosphere of almost 97 percent carbon dioxide blankets Venus. Even more challenging arethe clouds of highly corrosive sulfuric acid in Venus's atmosphere."(3) On these passage it shows some of the risk of Venus, and even the planet surface is over 800 degrees Farenheit,and the atmospheric pressure is 90 times greater that what experience on our planet. "Also notable,Venus has the hottest surface temperature of any planet in our solar system, even though Mercury is closer to our sun." (3) here is explaining the temperature of the surface of the planet Venus.

On the seek to learning more of Venus, the NASA is working on another approaches to studying Venus. " For example, some simplified electronics made of silicon carbide have been tested in a chamber simulating the chaos of Venus's surface and have lasted for three weeks in such conditions."(7) Here the NASA is giving the example of one project that could work to explore Venus on three weeks until it deteriorates. " Another project is looking back to and old technology called mechanical computers. These devices were first envisioned in the 1800s and played and important role in the 1940s during World War II... By comparison,systems that use mechanical parts can be made more resistant to pressure, heat, and other forces" (7) On these passage it's explained how the technology made on the past can be more resistant on Venus that the technology of today,even though that it is more powerful, flexible, and quick.

In conclution, exploring Venus can be a big proggres to the Earth, giving the challenges that Venus can give to the humans, These would help expand and meet the very edges of imagination and innovation. And, who knows? Maybe we will be able to live in Venus one day, but not until we decide to do the first step.

Score: 4