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I do believe that the use of technology, such as the one talked about in "Making Mona Lisa Smile", by Nick D'Alto, should be used in a classsroom to read the emotional expressions of students. I believe this because why not advance in our technology in school if we already are advancing in our technology outside of school.

In paragragh six D'Alto greatly explained how it would be if we actually had a computer sitting in front of us, reading our facial expressions. " 'A classroom computer could recognize when a student is becoming confused or bored '," Dr. Huang predicts. " 'Then it could modify the lesson, like an effective human instructor.' " (paragragh six, D'Alto) I agree with this quote because students now in todays age are already growing up in a society where technology around us is starting to become advanced. For example, cars used to have to be conducted by someone steering the wheel a foot on the peddle's, although now cars are able to drive themselves by just being charged. The quote explained that just by a student making a face expresson showing that we are bored, then the computer could change into a more fun and effetive lesson, to get students interested. Of course there is always that question, "What would the need of teachers be ?" I believe that teachers could still teach and assign homework, but this will highly beneifit them also because preparing a lesson on a computer that reads our expressions would not be hard at all. This would actually make school fun for students.

In paragragh six it also explained how our commercials and ads would run. "Imagine a computer that knows when you're happy or sad. For example, if you smile when a Web as appears on your screen, a similar ad might follow. But if you frown, the next ad will be different," (paragragh six, D'Alto). I like this qoute because it makes you think, not only does this have to be with ads and or commercials, but this could follow with tests in school. I recently took a big test for the semester in my sophomore year, in one of my classes, and the test was challenging. I found myself on one excerpt that was given to me dozing off alittle because how boring it was. Eventually finishing that excerpt i was not confident in my answers. Later on in the test I was soon given another excerpt but it was actually one that was interesting with alittle mystery and drama. Finishing that I was confident in my answers and I was told that I received a good score on that part of the test.

From the excerpts examples and from my example, I strongly believe that technology that can read students emotional expressions, should be used in the classroom for students. We should give students confidence on passing tests and assignments. Not just because we want to and there's no reason behind it, but

because if tehnology can advance in the outside world then why can it not advance here in school ?

Score: 4