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In this paragraph it talk about a star call venus even though the star is misleading to a planet call venus. In the solar system venus is the second planet from our sun. Many astronomer never landed foot on the planet they sent numerous spacecraft to land on the cloud draped world. Each of the mision was unmanned, and for good reason, no spacecraft survived the landing for more than a few hours.This is why not a single spaceship has touched the planet venus for 3 decades

because of how dangerous it is. Theirs 97 percent carbon dioxide in the planet venus. Even more challenging is that the cloud is highly corrosive sulfuric acid in venus atmosphere. On the surface of the planet, the temperauture is average over 800 degrees Fahrenheits, and the atmosphere pressure is 90 time greater than what earth have. This condition is far from what we human can encounter. NASA is working on other approaches to studying the planet venus. For example, they are simplifying electronic that is made out of silicon carbide that have been tested in a chamber simulating the chaos of the venus surface and it lasted for 3 weeks in such condition. Another project was they look back to an old technology called mechanicle computers. The device were first envision in 1800 and played an importance role in 1940s during World War two. Even though computer that exist in those year may be shocking, but the device makes a calculation by using gears and levers and it doesn't required electronic.

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