Better, juicer details were needed. My words don t make pictures yet. Oops, I mean misused. Over and over I used the same words, over and over, and then over and over again until my paper was over. The sentences in my paper are clear and delightful to read aloud.
Some sentences are long and stretchy, while some are short and snappy.
It s easy to read my paper aloud, I love the sound. You can tell that I have good sentence sense because my paper just flows. All excess baggage has been cut. Sentence beginnings are more alike than different. Some sentences should merge, others need to be cut in two.