If you have any comments or suggestions which may help improve this poem, simply enter them on the form below and then press the SEND button. All comments can be seen immediately below this form. Click here to join TYWC if you are not already a member. Darksomeone I totally agree with chala on this.
Suicide is a very valid topic for poetry.
But rhyming is out of place for such a sombre topic. Rhythm is more of what is needed. And if your kill yourself load a shell into a chamber of a 12gauge fill the barrel with water. Put it in your mouth and bang. Scrub the brain case no chance of survival.