One of the most important points to remember is that you can improve almost any wordy, awkward sentence by identifying the actor and the action. Then you can construct a new, effective sentence that begins with the subject and uses a strong, active verb and clearly expresses the meaning you intend. Many ideas can be expressed better with fewer words. One important remedy is to use coordination and subordination effectively. Coordination means to connect equal words or ideas with words such as and or but .
Subordination means to connect words or ideas with words such as although or because.
The first thing that Olsen missed as a manager is that he needed to know what was going on in the important areas of getting the cable company started. These key areas are the installation of equipment, the communities' responses, and the marketing of the start-up of the cable company. I appreciate the effort of the Quality Council members to obtain feedback on employees' impressions of management commitment to our Continuous Improvement Process. We will change the procedure Monday. We have found our previous procedure is too time consuming.