The results are indicative that the data are representative of the population. The results indicate that the data represent the population. From Diagnosis to Analysis to Revision These two principles about characters as subjects and actions as verbs help you explain why readers judge a sentence to be clear or unclear. Those principles also suggest how you can revise it. Ignoring short introductory phrases, underline the first seven or eight words in each of your sentences.
Sentences take more than six or seven words to get to a verb.
Verbs represent actions that are less specific than the abstractions around them. Find nominalizations that name the actions those characters perform. Change the nominalizations into verbs and adjectives. Make the characters the subjects of those new verbs. Rewrite the sentence with conjunctions like because, if, when, although.