Paragraphs are not connected. Ideas are hard to follow. The lack of organization detracts from meaning. Errors are few and do not detract from meaning and readability. Errors detract from the meaning and readability.
Some sentences are awkward.
Essay may not have been proofread. Frequent surface errors detract from the meaning and readability. Sentence structure is non standard. Use of sources enriches essay. Works Cited page and parenthetical citations are formatted correctly using correct MLA format.