Now you can put meat on the skeleton that your outline provides. Provide evidence to support your thesis. Discuss how a particular event or person influenced you. Explain why, with examples, you want to pursue your career or educational goals. Discuss the effect these events or people had upon you.
Specific examples are much more powerful and interesting than generalities.
Any writer will tell you that the beginning of an article, direct mail piece, or ad determines the success of that piece. Put your most interesting tidbit, anecdote, or experience in your lead. It means Powerful Angel in Tibetan. This essay goes on to describe incidents from her trips to Tibet and India, the lessons she learned, and her ambition to become a lawyer who will work for Tibetan independence. The city was burning.