You used research materials in a manner that demonstrated a lack of mastery of them. Examples of this are quotations that do not support the argument you are tying to make and strings of quotations that run on too long. You use materials in a competent but uninspired way to support your argument. You smoothly integrate the research materials you use into your argument. Your essay lacks coherence and cohesion.
Transitions are ineffective.
The paragraphs read like a list, with no connection between the sentences. The paragraphs have a general focus, but some sentences are unrelated. Coherence, cohesion, and transitions need work. Paragraphs are generally well developed with fewer than three problems of focus, unity, or coherence. Transitions may be a bit forced.