The opening introduces my characters and setting. The ending shows how the conflict is resolved. There are very few mistakes in grammar, spelling, or punctuation. I need more dialogue to show how my characters think and feel. Specific details would make the setting clearer.
Some events are unrelated to the conflict.
My voice is not strong, and so the mood is not clear. I change point of view once or twice. My beginning introduces setting and characters but could be more interesting. The ending is too abrupt. Mistakes sometimes make the story hard to read.