My voice is engaging and sets a tone for my essay. My conclusion wraps up my essay in an interesting way. There are very few spelling, punctuation, or grammar mistakes. My introduction could be more interesting. My opinion isn't quite clear.
Some reasons are unimportant or stray off the topic.
More details would help explain my reasons. One reason is out of order. Some transitions are weak. I need to sound more confident. My conclusion repeats what I've already said.