In the end I thought that my paper sounded bettter with the words than it did with the n'ts. But I didn't change the other ones because they were in quotes that people said. Tips for Revising Sentence Structure Creating space between sentences in order to break up the text and allow students to really see what they have written is a great idea but has several problems that I can foresee. Another suggestion that may take less time yet produce the same effect as separating the sentences is to have the students shrink their window so they can see only one line at a time. This, however, seems a bit problematic.
Students see only one line rather than a whole sentence.
Also, as one student pointed out , the limited space may be frustrating. Asking students to delete work is always a challange. One way to get around this attitude is to emphasize the need to save the original document. When details are then deleted from a paragraph, the author can always revert back to the original document. Especially when asking a partner to make changes to a paper, students need to have the security that their original work will not be lost.