My personal voice comes through clearly. The ending wraps up my narrative. My writing has very few grammar or spelling mistakes. My beginning could be more interesting. If I used a flashback, it needs a smoother transition into the narrative.
Some events are out of order.
Here and there, the narrative wanders off the main topic. I've used details, but I need more. Some passages have voice, but others sound flat. I need an ending that fits the narrative. I have some mistakes to correct.