She writes in the format given in the prompt. The writer gives three strong reasons that will matter to her audience. The writer uses some vivid words and phrases, but for most of the essay her voice is not strong. The writer uses transitional words well and orders her reasons from most to least important. Although she has included an introduction and a conclusion, both could be more interesting.
Some sentences are choppy, and some key ideas are unnecessarily repeated.
The writer focuses on the mode and topic given in the prompt and uses the correct format. Although the writer's voice does come through, the essay is missing some key elements. The writer needs at least one more reason to support his goal. Organization Elaboration is often not grouped with the reason it is meant to support. The argument is highly repetitive.