The title is perfect. I am especially taken by the scenes with the narrator and Viva in the room and nothing in particular going on between them. You snared a mood there and that is always difficult. I'm less enamoured with some of the personal reflections. My problem is that I had this niggling feeling that the author was taking me out of that scene and circumstance and speaking through the character in the story to express himself.
Some people think that fiction is about self-expression but that's baloney.
If you engage my head with your people and words then it's a bit nasty of you to then start expressing yourself. Give those characters rein. Thanks for this, Aaron. It's moody and prescient and fine and intrinsically interesting. Dear Aaron, This is an interesting story, but seems to lack a purpose.