I think this style works. Having your words transposed onto paper creates easily understood sentences. A tendency toward jargon diminishes. People with no real assumptions about how to construct a written sentence find that they already are constructing sentences orally, and they can adapt this method to create written documents. Frankly, I have reservations about most people's writing and style, including Dr. Follansbee.
Most people have difficulty finding the perfect words to fit the medium.
In general, much technical written language is obtuse and difficult to understand. Hey, somebody gave him a doctorate and a good job. What I intend to demonstrate here is that successful writing styles are quite varied. Learning to write and edit are processes that can successfully go in a variety of directions. The area where many special educators become involved with the student is when they do not develop writing skills at a normal rate.