Here are a few suggestions. Write only one thought to a sentence . The existing reservoir in most older mills, whether or not due to expansion, could likely benefit from a thorough cleaning, as well as a review of conditioning and monitoring equipment, and should include a calculation of oil retention time and reservoir capacity. It would also be wise to review conditioning and monitoring equipment, being sure to calculate oil retention time and reservoir capacity. Use the active voice when possible .
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Pulp at any pH between 4 and 10 can be bleached effectively by both sequences. People like to read varied, lively language. Particularly when the content is difficult or deeply technical, straightforward language is best. Omit irrelevant detail and unnecessary repetition . The less you clutter your sentences, the easier it is for the reader to understand them.