I saw you in a book. You were in a wizard's robe. You looked like a real witch going to Hogwarts. I think you are a great writer because when you write you are trying to express yourself. I thought that you did well because when you put Snape, Voldemort, and Quirrell in the story, it was better.
Most stories have a bad person.
Those are things I thought were good in the story. I thought that was cool. Well, I thought you needed to talk more about the stone. That was supposed to be the main part of the book, but you left it for the end. I still think you are a great writer because some of those details were funny and some were sad.