May not present a controlling idea. May not develop that idea with enough supportive detail to be convincing. Relationship of thesis to content Thesis controls the organization or development of thought. Thesis engages reader, controls the development of the essay, and insures unity Thesis controls the development of the subject matter. Thesis usually controls development of content.
Paper lacks focus.
Thesis may not be present. Paper lacks focus. Treatment of content Originality, honesty and freshness of thought A paper's honesty and freshness of thought are less obvious. B is more predictable. Sometimes a paragraph may be inadequately developed, but most are unified, coherent, and developed with sufficient concrete detail Paragraphs may need more concrete details to support the general ideas.