Mechanical errors are frequent. In short, the ideas, organization and style fall far below acceptable college writing. The paper attempts to address the assignment, but its treatment and development of the subject are as yet only rudimentary. While organization is present, it is neither clear nor especially effective.
Sentences are frequently awkward, ambiguous, and marred by serious mechanical errors.
Evidence of careful proofreading is scanty or non-existent. The whole piece, in fact, gives the impression of having been conceived and written in haste, or without adequate attention to the development, organization, and presentation of ideas. Its specific points are logically ordered, well developed, and unified around a clear organizing principle that is apparent early in the paper. The transitions between paragraphs are for the most part smooth, and the sentence structure pleasingly varied. Occasionally, it even shows distinctiveness, craft and memorability.