Facts are abundant. Context, vision, voice, and point of view are absent. The writer has not crafted a story with a heart. It is as impressive as reading the phone book out loud. People are nothing more than undeveloped supers.
Many people are jammed into a story.
None of them are given the chance to be known and heard clearly, in context. The pictures and words fight one another. When pictures and words don't match, pictures win, and words lose. The writer has not developed the ability to clear his or her mind and read the story as a viewer would. Developing this skill is critical for writers and editors.