Weak transitions and connectives Parts juxtaposed without being related. Reads like haiku or film script. He did it to them. Poor organization Digressive. Gets lost in detail.
Thought jumps around.
Topic has not been analyzed, broken into chunks, and sequenced in a purposive manner. Weak narrative Little sense of plot, conflict, drama, structure, buildup, climax. Referred to, but not told. Stated, but not argued. Attempts to move visual into verbal through description or proclamation.