Ideas, organization, and style are well below acceptable college writing. Treatment and development of subject is only in the beginning stages. Organization is present but is neither clear nor effective. Sentences are awkward, ambiguous, and contain serious errors. Little or no evidence of careful proofreading exists.
Reader feels writing was done in haste.
However, the information delivered is thin and commonplace. Reader is not instructed. Opening is uninteresting to reader. The conclusion is not engaging but is pedantic. Transitions between paragraphs lack smoothness.