The most powerful traditions last in society. Such as marriage. You could argue there are more divorces now, but as an idea it persists, and as an idea survives. After all, these broken marraiges existed before they broke. As regards clear expression, it'd be good to define your new terms unless they are totally obvious through their context, and obvious from the start.
Paragraphs are good too.
You obviously had a lot of non-foolish thought, but wrote it all out in a rush so as not to lose any big ideas, and didn't revise what you'd said enough as the effort required to write a huge chunk is quite large. Keep going, as you certainly improve over time. I don't think lessons in clear thinking and clear expression are given in schools. They should be. I don't know of a school where logical argument is on a syllabus, and that's a shame.