One of the things I liked about all the poems that came in was the range of ways in which nature was approached. This first sentence is elegant, intelligent and original. It's a beginning I would like to have written myself, and which I would keep if I had. The second is the one I feel applies to Dust. It may sound more like advice for mafia hitmen than poets, but it's been the theme of these workshops.
Poets have to be the five senses of their readers.
The bigger your ideas, the more important this is. Your reader will start to feel a little lost. The lines will start to seem colourless. Everything else is generalised, and you can't see, smell or touch generalisations. I want to know which corner, what kind of crack, whose love lost.