The following abbreviations will be used in my grading of your exams and papers. If you don't understand my comments about your work, please make an appointment to see me. I believe this is factually incorrect. Your paragraphs are too short.
Plagiarism results in an F on the paper.
Keep in mind that the point of almost every piece of written work that you will do in school or work is to make a certain assertion and prove it. Therefore your essay should discuss what you intend to prove, give evidence and examples to prove it, and summarize what it is you have shown. A business report would recommend an action and give evidence of why you think this is the correct action. You may use numbered footnotes at the end of each page or end notes at the end of the paper. Both must be accompanied by a bibliography in alphabetical order by author.