We love to help other writers succeed. For twenty years I've enjoyed the satisfaction of being a published author. Now, my editorial staff and I use our analytical, copyediting, and rewriting skills to help first-time and veteran authors create the finest books of which they are capable. If you feel that your work could be improved by professional manuscript analysis, copyediting or rewriting, please call or write so that we can discuss your needs.
Most manuscripts fail to find an agent or a publisher.
If more authors would go through the professional critiquing process before submitting to an agent, it would greatly improve their success rate. Manuscript analysis is one of the most frequently-requested services we provide. What you get from us is not opinions, for they are of little value. Some of the problems you've identified were areas with which I already had some discomfort, but was unable to pinpoint the precise source. Others I hadn't even considered, but can not deny.