I don't think that it will take too long as your figures and tabel are prepared already. Comments keyed to the text. 1. need official thesis cover page. You have this in the latter part of the text. Before I see next draft, all references should be finalized.
Next draft needs all final figures and pictures.
Not quite parallel as no intensity is given for natural case. Need to rewrite for clarity. Remember, pore pressure lowers resisting force by changing effective normal force. AWK sentence, hard to follow. Rewrite of clarity.