Everyone was critiquing it by putting lots of commas in their comments. I'm really trying to make myself smile and be happy. If you are trying to figure out what's wrong, you have a life of worry. You know what makes you happy. Go out and do it.
People forget to be happy.
It is a choice. You can sing in the shower or be lost in thought or worry. Those decisions include the nature of your reality. Birds don't sing until you are birds singing. Even with purely physical realm consciousness, leaps are the way to get somewhere.