In other words, they don't make it personal. But it can still be a hard quality to achieve and even harder to recognize in your own writing. Ask them if they got a sense of the kind of person you are, or if they were able to picture you as they were reading. Details, Details, Details One way to make your essay instantly more personal and interesting is to use plenty of details. An essay without details is like pizza without sauce.
Details provide the color, the spice, and the life of the essays.
Using detail means getting specific. Each and every point that you make needs to be backed up by specific instances, examples, and scenarios taken from your experience. It is these details that make your story special, unique, and interesting. There is an essay in our Globe Trotters package, for example, written by someone who knew how to use details to bring his essay to life. He is very specific, even from the first sentence.