Please help in the following sentence. My teacher, Lowell, indicated these sentence is not correct. Thanks to my language partner, I made it correction. However, I don't know why I cannot write that way. It is because Korean parents think that studying hard is the best thing that students should do, so they don't want their children work during the teenage times.
American teenagers are more versatile than Korean ones.
Talking about the word 'one', I've juse learned the usage about 'one'. But, I don't know when and where I shoud use 'one'. If there are some other mistakes, Please let me know. If you make me some coffe, I'll give you one of my biscuits. If you need any money, please let me know.