I will be changing that beginning. Go on your instinct as a reader. The next thing to make sure you have is dialogue. Dialogue is something many people avoid writing. Not every story has to have it, but most do.
Dialogue can be the hardest and the easiest thing to write.
I will be writing an article about writing dialogue in the coming weeks. Dialogue is a way for your character to develop thoughts, attitude, and action. Your dialogue can be a huge help in developing plot. The way to answer these questions is to try reading aloud. If you stumble or find that things don't make sense you have something to work out.