Don't tell your readers what they already know, don't need to know, of can infer from the text. Imagine someone trying to learn the game of chess. Smile on her face. Providing irrelevant or more information than the readers need to know. Baseball, one of our oldest and most popular outdoor summer sports in terms of total attendance at ball parks and viewing on television, has the kind of rhythm of play on the field that alternates between players' passively waiting with no action taking place between the pitches to the batter and exploding into action when the batter hits the pitched ball to one of the player and he fields it.
Baseball has a rhythm that alternates between waiting and explosive action.
As you edit, first find the nominalizations you can replace with clauses. Nothing may come of these preparations. A clerk checks and records all incoming mail. 2.Although Altgeld Hall is regularly populated by students, close study of the building as a structure is seldom undertaken. 3.He dropped out of high school on account of the fact that it was necessary for him to help support his family.