On the second page, a character is talking in a paragraph. Within that same graf, another person starts speaking, but it's eleven lines before the author gets around to identifying who the new speaker is. It's confusing as hell because a new paragraph wasn't started, so you assume it's the same person, but the dialogue is such that it has to be a new person. This is only on page two , and I'm ready to throw this book across the room. Viewpoints are shifted constantly without warning.
Antecedents are maddeningly unclear.
McLaren doesn't seem to like identifying people by name, preferring to use their position, except she doesn't give you adequate means to distinguish the characters, so you don't know who the hell's talking. Too much dependence on narration, not nearly enough on action. Mind you, I'm only on page 54.