I nclude enough specific details and examples to develop the paragraph. E xclude any ideas that don t support the topic sentence. I mprove coherence with key words and ideas, similar sentence patterns, and transitional expressions. O rganize your ideas with an appropriate method. To avoid repetition of the same word, however, substitute pronouns and synonyms.
Computer shoppers have to consider cost.
On the other hand, careful shoppers can purchase good equipment for that amount of money if they comparison shop. This computer is killing me. Whenever I stare at it, my eyes hurt . WheneverI type, my hands ache. If we don t reward good educators, teaching will become a lost art.