The living room floor is coated with hot crimson liquid, a decaying odor emanates from the double doors, they are firmly closed. Cable awakens, there are large claw marks engraved in the floor along with the hot sent of blood. Cable gets up, no pain accompanies him, all that is left of the shot wound is an oval scar. He isn't sure if he can wait any longer, especially now. Cable leaves, for the voice, for his child, his little girl.
Cable goes off.
All comments can be seen immediately below this form. Your descriptions are very vivid, and interesting, which is hard to do with descriptions. I suggest that you maybe try spacing the different viewpoints. Like, leave a line between every viewpoint. Except at the end, when there's about one sentence for each.