Wait I just re read your entire post I think the exclusion you re talking about is in my talk page post not the draft I posted What I meant to ask was what are examples of things you object to in my draft open question for anyone reading thisI m not sold on my draft as the best version possible actually I think a couple parts could flow a bit better toward the end of sections This was kinda a tricky article to write Note that I ve pinged the 5 editors whose names I see on this discussion page for feedback