The use of both in regards to and in terms of are bad enough but their incorporation in the same sentence is a dubious achievement They have been removed but the next sentence surely needs more work What is the issue with the changing landscape what is that landscape and why is this issue whatever it is among the new pope s tasks The last part about congregants seek ing their demands also needs clarification It looks like parts of the AP article on which much of the article is based have been copied and the paraphrase is still too close and edited in a manner which reduces clarity