I think the article reads pretty well The quotes far from being turgid are essential for explaining It s a real relief to read a wiki entry that actually quotes the subject and his critics rather than trying to ineptly summarise them You re right there are a few repetitions but the controversy section certainly is of interest Indeed I notice the Daily Telegraph quoted it in full on Saturday suggesting it is of interest to their million or so readers A criticism section would be welcome I m not sure what you mean by the practices integrity section since as the Sourcewatch entry on Hari shows they contradict each other E g Littlejohn accused him of being on drugs on his show Private Eye accused him of pretending to have taken drugs when he hasn t They seem like a contradictory jumble of accusations none of which come from credible sources If you are looking for wiki entries that need tidying up I can think of hundreds that need it urgently However if you proceed I will look forward to sparring with you on it