Finally I only changed the second paris economy reference to industry in the Paris region The first Paris economy is fine as it is widely understood as such but the second reference I changed to a eliminate repetition and b give the layman reader a cocluding scope of the area we re talking about Paris on a map extends only as far as Paris and we re talking larger than that here Trust me it is details like this that make the difference between a widely comprehensive article and one targeted to those already familiar with its subject matter