Hi Love to help out with DoubIndemn Yeah it s a drag there isn t a line of people wanting to help out with this great picture I don t understand it a whole lot of lesser pictures have crowds all bumping each other wanting to edit My first comment to my brand new collaborator is that your intro rewrite struck me as being a tad too beefy Wait a day or two then look back and see if a little of the background of the actual case para 3 might not go better a little further down Likewise I might trim para 4 some I think the real standout item there is the L of C significant deeming in 1992 I try to keep leads as pared down as possible These were my thoughts when I first was checking out your edit BTW before I got your note Hope it s okay to write directly a less blunt way of saying bluntly about stuff like this I hope you ll be just as blunt back I ll give the article a better read in the morning when my eyeballs aren t hanging down the front of my face Nice to meet you I m looking forward to this