GA Review This review is transcluded from Talk Seekers novel series GA1 The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review Reviewer Hello dear Derild You might remember me from MOTD This is a nice article simply written informative and readable I ve done a quick see through though and found a few okay nitpicky merciless person that I am a bunch of concerns Here they are talk Seekers follows four young bear cubs Kallik a polar bear Lusa a black bear Ujurak a small grizzly bear who can change into any animal and Toklo a grizzly bear I think follows the adventures of might sound better Dogs were considered but rejected because they were too close to cats in their hierarchal social organization their pack and hunting lifestyles and their territoriality their is unnecessary in its second and third usage The company wanted her to write another series on animals just not about cats This sounds slightly awkward maybe a comma or two will make it flow more smoothly HarperCollins suggested dogs but Holmes was reluctant they guard their territories Direct quotes need direct references The statement about HarperCollins suggesting dogs especially needs a reference because it s referred to in the introduction the all action excitement that the Erins love so much Same here the company then thought about horses knowing how Holmes also like them This sentence sounds a bit awkward too there s something grammatically incorrect in that sentence methinks but unfortunately I m too dumb to lay my finger on it myself the main inspiration for the series is Inuit beliefs and the Native American languages The great grammar mystery again Lusa means black in Choctaw while Kallik means lightning or storm in Inuit 2 Shouldn t Choctaw be linked to Choctaw language However even there Ujurak who leads the journey feels that they need to go further into the Arctic I think a comma after journey might make the prose smoother Seekers follows four young bear cubs Kallik a polar bear Lusa a black bear Ujurak a small grizzly bear who can change into any animal and Toklo a grizzly bear Here a serial comma is used while in other examples such as Lusa Kallik and Toklo and The Last Wilderness Fire in the Sky and Spirits in the Stars the extra comma is omitted Either can be used but it has to be consistent throughout the article The First Series section could be expanded quite a lot I think especially since the books don t get articles of their own yet Children s Literature picked up the environmental theme it also commented themes such as commented on is probably better approach three bears mdash mdash otherwise you crash She also cleverly deals with the theme of racism through a unique and honest approach three bears of different color different backgrounds and different beliefs turn to each other for survival and friendship Kirkus Review thought Hunter creates a richly sensuous world filled with cruelty beauty tenderness savagery and just enough underlying legendary background to add mystery they also wrote that too much detail went into developing the characters and setting and there was very little plot 7 At first they re complimenting the book and then they re also criticizing it Maybe something along the lines of mystery however they criticized the weakness of the plot and the excessive detail in character development and setting Other media could simply be External links no All in all this article has a solid base and good references but it needs much improvement to get there I m sure thattyping like crazy waay after midnight and getting up in the morning with bleary bloodshot eyes some good effort will benefit it greatly though Keep up the good work Love User talk Clementina