Of course they are I can see I didn t word that very well and I m sure Josette didn t mean it should be poked down at the tail of the article or whatever Of course ownership is important as are a lot of other points but they can t all be put in the first three sentences and don t deserve to be The problem is a suggested rewrite showing the suggested structure of the whole article would be a waste of effort instantly hacked and attacked by POVers What would you say to the first three sentences I suggested then followed by other information in order of logical descending relevance much like a good article would be constructed