Its not just getting lost though is it Its an example that illustrates the theme The line establishes what the theme is supposed to be and then professes to outline how this is done by saying what we see She s in a new city and we can see this because of her trouble navigating She s also living out of boxes etc but I d only use one example to keep it simple Then I d use an visual example for the other point battling Taylor and or Flynn to show her alone in a man s world I m not wedded to my particular edit but a correction is needed because the examples listed are not what we see The line is trying to say that the broader theme is established with certain examples which to me made sense except the couple of things listed were bad examples because they aren t what we see They were examples of vague story arcs that needed to be much clearer and simpler examples If its decided that the line is better used by describing the broader examples listed above that s fine too but the line has to reflect that and be rewritten to remove We see this by Even the wording is poor after leaving Atlanta is completely wrong and could ve at the very least been corrected to arriving FROM Atlanta instead of being reverted multiple times to something that s obviously incorrect If we use some of the points and examples raised here concepts that better show how the theme is illustrated we can have a section much superior to what s there now