I m having trouble getting over perhaps because of It still reads like WP OR as to me perhaps seems like maybe with respect to contemplating or hypothesizing And although its not specifically on the list for WP WTW lets remember that guideline is not limited to the examples That being said I found the use of that phrase in well over 500 articles with many being GA quality so I will not let that cloud my opinion on the GA nature of this article I also don t like mentioning that he was shot then explaining why 3 4 sentences later You may want to draw the reader in which would be great for a novel or newspaper article but we are an encyclopedia first That being said I also won t let this affect the overall opinion With the changes that you have made I believe the quality of this article is much improved and I am happy to promote this article to Good Article Cheers