1 South Park Hi Regarding your edits to 1 South Park please do not rearrange the plot summary as there is no reason for A plot and B plot to be summarized separately Care should be taken to provide them in a way that mirrors how they occurred concurrently as much as possible Also Fifth Graders is not a proper noun This incites Butters and Jimmy and an angry group of Fifth Graders with an idea is wrong Butters and Jimmy came up with one idea and the fifth graders came up with a different one Regarding the passage Despite being at Token s house mistaking a concerned Stan Kyle and Kenny as the killers the real killer manages to get inside and proceeds to put Muscle Man Marc in boiling water Finding Rumper Tumpskin Cartman is forced to watch his toy s head blown off by the culprit Cartman s doll Polly Prissypants two points First it is only necessary to summarize the plot All we need to inform the reader is that more of Cartman s toys are being destroyed We do not need to emphasize specific details about the mutilations This is why the previous summary is more streamlined Second you mention Rumper Tumpskin and Muscle Man Marc without explain who or what they are Given the number of varied non human and fantasy characters that appear in the series you can t assume that readers know who these people are This is another reason why just saying Despite being at Token s house Cartman discovers Muscle Man Marc and Rumper Tumpskin two more of his toys destroyed with the remaining one a doll named Polly Prissypants sitting in an armchair with a revolver claiming responsibility for all the toy murders is simpler and better It explains to the reader what is happening in a direct and to the point manner Thanks