Traveling west northwest Two C was initially in a favorable environment Again don t refer to a TD like this That s a number not a name Kiko began to explosively deepen and by 1800 UTC it intensified into a Category 3 hurricane on the SSHWS bypassing both Category 1 and 2 status Because Kiko explosively deepen ed it isn t really necessary to mention that it skipped Category 1 and 2 EPHC had revised their forecast and were now expecting the storm to accelerate EPHC revised their forecast and expected the storm to accelerate Hurricane Kiko was responsible for 12 ft 3 7 m waves along Newport Beach California resulting in more than 100 lifeguard rescues and rough seas Because there was 12 foot waves the part about rough seas at the end is not needed While the previous cyclone was dissipating the next cyclone of the season was starting to form south of the Mexican coast Kind of redundant and unnecessary Moving west over warm waters the disturbance was classified as a tropical depression about 90 mi 140 km south of Acapulco early on September 6 Reword this to A disturbance moved westward across warm waters and intensified into a tropical depression about 90 mi 140 km south of Acapulco early on September 6 the EPHC downgraded Lorena weakened into a Category 1 hurricane 2 as the storm was expected to emerge into the southern Gulf of California in about 48 hours and thereafter meander What does the part after the reference have to do with the EPHC downgrading Lorena to a Category 1 Separate this with either a period or semi colon Subsequently Lorena attained its secondary peak with winds of 105 mph 170 km h while passing about 150 mi 240 km south of Cabo San Lucas Why mention a secondary peak combination of strong shear and very cold sea surface temperatures The part about very cold sea surface temperatures could mean 25 F P Was there a specific SST mentioned in the MWR Even if there wasn t don t use the term very cold which found no evidence of an eyewall thus Manuel was downgraded into a tropical storm 6 about 600 mi 970 km south of San Diego What day did Manuel weaken to a tropical storm Several hours later Manuel reached a secondary peak wind speed of 90 mph 140 km h Again why mention a secondary peak Guadalupe Island 2 before dissipating at 1200 UTC that day 6 We already know this was on September 20 So that day isn t needed Along the northern portion Baja California Manuel brought showers and high waves Why did you wikilink Baja California That is like the 8th time you mentioned it Several hours after Manuel dissipated a tropical disturbance formed 200 mi 320 km Several hours after Manuel dissipated on September 20 a tropical disturbance formed 200 mi 320 km with winds of 50 mph 80 km h made its closet approach the Hawaii Narda had a closet P Campers were also ordered by police to find shelter on higher ground Where were these campers at answer coastal parks Tropical Octave was considered the worst flood in Pima County history Missing a word It is also regarded as the worst tropical system to affect Arizona What is the it The storm or Pima County P Around 3 000 buildings were destroyed due to Octave 67 A total of 853 structures were destroyed by Octave while 2 052 others were damaged These two sentences are confusing and contradictory There were around 3 000 buildings destroyed and a total of 853 structures were also destroyed Something is missing here Maybe for the first sentence you meant Around 3 000 buildings were impacted by Octave In Mexico 12 in 300 mm was reported in Altar 12 inches of what Beer P Also wikilink Altar