Your explanation as requested I revised the previous version a bit to cater it more to your liking I fail to see what needs explaining but I will now dissect each statement in the opening paragraph Rachel Aliene Corrie April 10 1979 March 16 2003 was an American member of the International Solidarity Movement ISM Explanation She was a member of the International Solidarity Movement She died while acting as a human shield during the demolition of a Palestinian home in Gaza Explanation She died while acting as a human shield during the demolition of a Palestinian home in Gaza You may watch the multiple award winning documentary Occupation 101 to verify this Something tells me that you are going to argue whether or not the documentary is a reliable source So let me preemptively respond The documentary won 2 awards at the Beverly Hills Film Festival another award at the Artist Film Festival another at the East Lansing Film Festival another at the Deadcenter Film Festival and yet another at the New Orleans Film Festival Not only that but the documentary features numerous interviews with scholars religious leaders humanitarian workers and NGO representatives from your rightful homeland Israel Witnesses state that she was caught underneath a bulldozer while the IDF investigation reported that she died after being struck by falling debris Explanation Witnesses stated that she got caught underneath a bulldozer Yet again you may refer to Occupation 101 to see real time footage of witnesses testifying to that And as you know the IDF investigation reported that she died after being struck by falling debris Furthermore while the investigation reported that the driver of the bulldozer could not see her witnesses maintain that there was nothing to obscure the driver s view Explanation The investigation reported that the driver of the armored bulldozer could not see her Witnesses maintained that there was nothing to obscure the driver s view Obviously there are disputes on this and we are never going to know the truth but it would be an insult to her memory to only include one perspective in the introduction At the time of her death Corrie was a student at the Evergreen State College in Washington Explanation She was indeed a student at Evergreen Once again I am going to assume that you will insist that we include that she was there at the time of the Second Intifada presumably to make it clear that she knowingly entered a war zone and by extension that she was at least in part or perhaps fully as some would have it responsible for her own death I believe this would fall under POV no If you must include that somewhere in the body of the page not as part of the opening remarks