Someone is looking for writing advice, this is what they want looked at. What do you think would be the best things for them to change. The rest is written from a first-person point of view.

An area that I would like advice on is in the beginning should I concentrate more on the conversation my grandma, my mom and I were having before I went to my kickboxing class or should I tell more about what I was thinking in my head?

And another area I would like advice on is the ending. I still don't know if I want to end the story with how I felt when the class was over, or do I want to take the reader home with me so they can know what I told my grandma about the class.

People (who)
Answer: 
•	Me (Shamaulla Lewis)
•	My grandma
•	My mom
•	My kickboxing teacher
Places (where)
Answer:
•	My house
•	The kickboxing studio
Events (what)
Answer:
•	This was the first day I went to my kickboxing class.
Setting (when)
Answer:
•	The story starts at my house and then the main event happens in the kickboxing studio.
Significance (why)
Answer:
•	This is significant because it was the first time I was going to a kickboxing class and doing kickboxing with a professional.
Purpose
The reason why I’ll be writing this memoir is to try to explain to the readers what I felt when I was going to my first kickboxing class. I want to explain it so the reader can understand how I felt when I was at home getting ready to go. I want to explain it so the reader can understand how I felt when I was driving with my mom on my way to the class; and I want to explain how I felt during the kickboxing class and after the kickboxing class. I hope I can show the difference in my feelings as the day went by.
Audience
I don’t know yet. I want to write like I’m writing to kids my age, but I want to write so that adults would enjoy reading it too. I think I might go with kids my age so I can write it so that in the reader’s head it sounds like my voice and how I speak every day.
Tone
I want the tone of this to be friendly and I think I want to have moments when the reader laughs so they enjoy it from the beginning to the end. And I want it to be like I’m talking to a friend so it’s more of a conversation and not like getting information like when I read a textbook for school.

First (Beginning)
Answer:
The beginning of my memoir will explain how my morning started before getting ready to go to my first kickboxing class. I was nervous but not to the point that my heart was beating fast but more like I just kept thinking about it in my head. I had a nice breakfast, and I want to explain it so that the reader can taste it. So, I have to figure out how to describe the pancakes and the syrup and how that made me feel and how the kitchen smelled so it’s like the reader is there.

And there was a funny conversation that my grandma, my mom and me had that I thought was funny. My grandma was pretty much saying that my mom and I really thought we were going to become kung fu masters on our first day.
Next (Middle)
Answer:
I want the reader to understand that I was becoming more nervous. I was starting to think more about the kickboxing class, and I was worried that I wasn’t going to do well and there was a point I wanted to tell my mom that I didn’t want to go. And I think this is the part where I want to put a flash back scene like the story we read in class about the girl who had a skateboarding tournament. I want to take the reader back to something my mom said that made me not feel as nervous in the car ride to the kickboxing class.
Last (End)
Answer:
I’m not sure if I want the story to end with how I felt when I started the kickboxing class and what I learned or if I want to continue and end the story when I finally got home and my mom and I were able to share what we did with my grandma. I have to see how the story goes because I don’t want it to be a long story. I want it to be something that the reader enjoys.
Reflections and Lessons Learned (Conclusion)
Answer:
One of the main lessons I want the reader to understand is that learning something new doesn’t always mean that you have to be perfect. Sometimes it’s all about just having fun and trying your best.