Grade my essay based on these criteria:
1. Core Values (aka Information) a. Can you name at least 4-5 of the author’s core values? b. Do you detect a variety of values, or do the values repeat? Examples of NOT varied values: hard work, determination, perseverance Examples of more varied values: autonomy, resourcefulness, healthy boundaries, diversity 2. Vulnerability a. Does the essay sound like it’s mostly analytical or like it’s coming from a deeper, more vulnerable place? Another way of asking this: Does it sound like the author wrote it using mostly his or her head (intellect) or his or her heart and gut? b. After reading the essay, do you know more about the author AND feel closer to him or her? 3. “So what” moments (aka Important & interesting connections) a. Can you identify at least 3-5 “so what” moments of insight in the essay? b. Are these moments kind of predictable, or are they truly illuminating? 4. Craft a. Do the ideas in the essay connect in a way that is logical, but not too obvious (aka boring)? b. Can you tell that the essay represents a series of carefully considered choices and that the author spent a lot of time revising the essay over the course of several drafts? c. Is it interesting and succinct throughout? If not, where do you lose interest? Where could words be cut or which part isn’t revealing as much as it could be?

Include references to what graduates of uc have achieved in the field of aerospace and how that inspires me and it is related to my goals also?
UC Prompt# 6. Think about an academic subject that inspires you. Describe how you have furthered this interest inside and/or outside of the classroom.
From folding my first paper airplane at five, my fascination with flight ignited, leading me to countless hours designing and testing models. This early passion guided me into high school chemistry, where Mr. Foster’s engaging experiments—like dissolving a chicken drumstick with piranha solution—deepened my interest in chemical reactions.
When my AP Chemistry class didn’t meet my expectations, I persevered by utilizing online resources and virtual labs, ultimately earning a 4 on the rigorous exam. This experience taught me resilience and self-directed learning. Beyond academics, inspired by Scott H. Young’s “MIT Challenge” and “Ultralearning,” I pursued engineering and CAD design. Collaborating with friends, I built a tricycle go-kart, overcoming sourcing challenges and adapting a pre-built frame. This project enhanced my teamwork, problem-solving skills, and ability to innovate under pressure.
Aspiring to aerospace engineering, I blend chemistry and engineering to focus on sustainable aviation technologies. Learning about UCLA alumnus Kevin Mark, a Propulsion Engineer at NASA, and UC Irvine alumna Olya Filimonova, a Mass Properties Engineer at NASA, has been particularly inspiring. Mr. Mark's work on developing advanced propulsion systems that enhance fuel efficiency and reduce emissions exemplifies the innovative spirit of UC alumni and aligns perfectly with my goal to create eco-friendly aviation solutions. Additionally, Ms. Filimonova’s expertise in mass properties emphasizes the importance of precision and specialization in aerospace projects, reinforcing my commitment to excellence in this field.
I envision developing innovative eco-friendly aviation solutions, such as electric propulsion systems, to significantly reduce environmental impact without compromising safety or efficiency. At the University of California, I plan to join the Aerospace Engineering Society, engage in research on sustainable materials, and pursue internships to advance aerospace technology. Following in the footsteps of UC pioneers like Kevin Mark and Olya Filimonova, I aim to collaborate on projects that push the boundaries of sustainable flight.
From paper airplanes to self-taught AP Chemistry and building a go-kart, my journey has taught me that passion and perseverance drive achievement. Inspired by UC aerospace leaders, I am eager to contribute to and grow within the UC community, advancing the future of flight through innovation and dedication.