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Personal Statement - Fairleigh Dickinson University of British Columbia’ MSACS Program

Dear Visa Officer,

I am writing to apply for a study permit to transfer to Fairleigh Dickinson University of British Columbia (FDU-UBC) in pursuit of their MSACS program. This decision is driven by my desire to expand my knowledge of computer science’s role in architecture and its application towards my long-term career goals. I assure you that this endeavor is a temporary one, as I am committed to returning to China upon the completion of my studies.

My journey towards this decision started when I participated in an exchange program at the School of Architecture Urban Planning Construction Engineering at Politecnico di Milano. In this program, I was exposed to innovative architectural design techniques, which sparked my interest in leveraging advanced computer computation in architectural design. Subsequently, I successfully completed my M.S. in Advanced Architectural Design at Cornell University, further solidifying my belief in the transformative power of computer programming in the field of architecture.

Although few machine learning products are currently directly applicable to architecture, I firmly believe that machine learning and artificial intelligence can greatly enhance the efficiency and efficacy of architectural design. The limited commercial usage of such technology is mainly due to the relatively small architecture market, with tech companies focusing on other targeted sectors. However, I strongly believe that the integration of machine learning and architecture holds substantial potential in the long run.

After realizing the potential of merging computer science and architecture, I enrolled in Northeastern University’s M.S. in Computer Science program. However, upon two months of study, I realized that the program’s focus on building a strong fundamental understanding of computer science concepts did not align perfectly with my career goals. It is for this reason, I intend to transfer to FDU-UBC’s MSACS program, which offers a more suitable curriculum to meet my specific aspirations.

The MSACS program at FDU-UBC not only emphasizes the practical application of computer science but also provides core computer science courses that establish a strong technical foundation. By integrating core computer science courses with electives such as “Artificial Intelligence,” “Data Mining,” and “Computer Graphics,” I will gain specialized knowledge directly applicable to my desired career path. Moreover, FDU-UBC’s emphasis on hands-on experience and collaboration with faculty members enables me to actively engage in projects that integrate advanced computational techniques into the design process. This experiential learning will equip me with the necessary skills and expertise to bridge the gap between computer science and architecture effectively.

As an esteemed institution located in an environment known for its burgeoning technology and design sectors, FDU-UBC provides numerous networking opportunities and internships for students. I am excited about the possibility of connecting with professionals and industry leaders actively involved in integrating technology into architecture. This exposure will allow me to contribute to cutting-edge projects, where I can apply my acquired knowledge to address real-world challenges in the architecture industry.

In addition to the comprehensive academic offerings, with only US18.8K tuition fee, the MSACS program at FDU-UBC is also cost-effective when compared to the US55.2K in Northeastern University. Not to mention, the excellent social security in Vancouver, Canada, makes it an appealing choice for pursuing my studies.

Looking ahead, I am confident that the knowledge and skills gained through the MSACS program at FDU-UBC will enable me to contribute to innovative advancements in architectural design and technology, both globally and in China. The fusion of computer science and architecture holds immense potential, especially in a country like China where urbanization and technological advancements continue to shape the landscape. With this in mind, returning to my home country upon completion of my studies has always been my plan.

I should note that my father relies on me as the sole support since my mother’s passing. To ensure sufficient financial support for my academic pursuits, my father operates our family business, Beijing Hengyu Runda Technology Co., Ltd., and manages my 20% stake in the company. His understanding and encouragement have been critical motivators for me to excel in my studies and strive for achieving my goals. I aim to inject vitality into our business by introducing advanced computer computation techniques that enhance efficiency and innovation in architectural design. By integrating machine learning and artificial intelligence, I aspire to assist architects in streamlining the design process and creating sustainable, aesthetically pleasing structures. Leveraging my familial connections and collaborating with local design firms, I will work towards implementing these technological advancements effectively.

In conclusion, I firmly believe that pursuing the MSACS program at FDU-UBC is the most logical step towards accomplishing my long-term career goals. My commitment to returning to China, coupled with the immense potential that this program holds for my professional development and contribution to the Chinese architecture market, further solidifies my determination. I kindly request you to approve my study permit application and express my gratitude for your time and favorable consideration.

Sincerely,

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