grade the following on the AP Language and Composition rubric for rhetorical analysis: "With his mother's encouragement, Trevor leaves his home after high school to escape his abusive stepfather. In an effort to earn enough money for university tuition, Trevor, Sizwe, and their group start a business selling CDs to minibus drivers from a repurposed shipping container. The apartheid system has resulted in scarce job opportunities in Alexandra, particularly affecting impoverished black youth like Trevor. Although technically illegal, Trevor's actions of piracy hardly seemed "criminal" as the alternative was either working a minimum wage job or hanging out on street corners. With the help of Sizwe, the group becomes more profitable by offering credit and loans to the drivers and locals. However, despite selling CDs for two years, Trevor is no closer to saving enough for university tuition. Rather than feeling disheartened by this setback, Trevor views his lackluster achievements as mundane - it is just another day in the hood. One day, Trevor and his group are hanging out in the shipping container where they routinely tease their friend G about having a job at a nice clothing store. G enters the shipping container dressed in slippers and socks, which is not appropriate attire for work. He nonchalantly tells the group that he was fired due to accusations of theft. Trevor can't shake off the suspicion that G might have intentionally stolen, sabotaging his job to fit back in with the group. According to Trevor, the appeal of Alexandra's hood lies in its accepting environment and the avoidance of life's bigger questions.

Through interesting stylistic choices throughout the passage, the author provides important insight into the culture and society in which Trevor finds himself in Soweto. More specifically, the passage serves as an opportunity for the reader to understand the underlying realities for those, like Trevor, who lived in "the hood." It also explores implications living in the hood holds for their current lives, as well as their future prospects of escaping their current environment. Throughout the passage, the author personifies the hood, stating that “the hood has a gravitational pull," and, "the hood was strangely comforting." Using this personification the author implies that the hood is an active force in young people, like Trevor's, lives. By saying the hood has a "gravitational pull", the author insinuates that the community in which one finds themselves, similarly to gravity, is a powerful, inevitable, often inescapable force. Through this personification, the author helps the reader more fully understands the forces that perpetuate the cycle of poverty seen in Soweto, and also indirectly applauds himself for eventually escaping the commanding force that tried to drag him down. Additionally, the use of short sentences and casual dialogue when G describes the firing from his job makes the concept of a black man getting fired appear as ordinary, and almost expected. From this, the reader becomes aware of the unfortunate and unfair realities of Soweto where occurrences such as this are commonplace. This passage serves as a pertinent reminder of the profound effects a community can have on an individual and their future goals. 
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