Do this text in the style of a novel dialouge first then chracter name: use dialouge tags like Said:JIMMY

Fleet Captain, I checked with systems twice, all clear, and did as you requested with the sweeps, all clear; you should be hearing them loud and clear!
MCCONNELL
Ok, thanks, COMS
Captain McConnell wondered what could be going on with Lemma 14 so she contacted Lemma 14 to see if they had any idea's.
MCCONNELL (CONT'D)
Lemma 14, CAG-224 COMS check how copy?
LEMMA 14
Lemma 14, CAG-224 read you in the green strength 94.4, over
MCCONNELL
CAG-224 Rodger, Lemma 14, we are unable to raise Lemma 12 at this time; they are +10 past their scheduled COMS check over?
LEMMA 14
Acknowledged CAG-224 not sure why they’ve moved to 23 decimal 2 over.’ ‘Understood Lemma 14, CAG-224 copies, out.
MCCONNELL
Understood Lemma 14, CAG-224 copies, out.
Changing frequencies, Fleet Captain McConnell tries again.
MCCONNEL
‘Lemma 12, CAG-224 COMS check over
LEMMA 12
Receiving you, CAG-224, there was some interference on the primary. Sorry for scaring you.
MCCONNELL
CAG-224, Rodger and consider yourself on report for breaching COMS Protocol 45, Article 5, Sub-Article 29 (f) of the Space Movement Act 2379, for failure to notify the on-scene commanding officer of a change in radio frequency during a rescue operation, and the only acceptable response Lemma 12 that won’t have you on an insubordination charge is yes, Fleet Captain?
LEMMA 12
Lemma 12, CAG-224, with due respect, you are not my CO.
Hearing this the Adminstrator of Hydaes Station and McConnell's sister Tilly came on COMS.
TILLY
Lemma 12, Hades Actual
LEMMA 12
Lemma 12, go ahead
TILLY
Lemma 12, how well do you know your standing orders manual? Standing Order 97/39.7 comes to mind?
LEMMA 12
Hades Actual, Lemma 12 I recall them very well. That standing order states...
TILLY
Right, Lemma 12; continue.
LEMMA 12
It states that under rescue conditions, the commanding officer shall be the most senior ranking officer present in the field. All orders shall come from said officer, until either relieved or replaced by an officer of more senior rank.
TILLY
Excellent Lemma 12; at present, advise me who is senior in the field as of now.
LEMMA 12
You, Ma am!
TILLY
Close, oh, so close."Try again. "Lemma 12: I am a senior officer that’s true; I am a station chief administrator, not a fleet captain. The fleet captain you disagree with is family, so tread carefully and don't be foolish. There is a point when it comes to the law.Now, please try again!
LEMMA 12
Roger that.Fleet Captain McConnell is ranking officer. 
TILLY
Vary Good, Lemma 12. Now, other than to inform me that CAG-118 is stabilised and ready to be brought in. If I need to deal with you again. Fleet Captain McConnell won’t need to waste her time placing you on a charge, Hades Actual, out.
MCCONNELL
Now that’s out of the way, Lemma 12, can we act like professionals and not like raw cadets?" and conceivably merely perform things. Like, oh, I don’t know,"say our jobs and our legal, ethical, and moral responsibilities to the crew of CAG-118?
LEMMA 12
Lemma 12, CAG-224, sorry, Fleet Captain, Wilco shall comply as ordered
MCCONNEL
Bridge, COMS
TAMMY
Go ahead
MCCONNELL
COMS, status update on our shuttle?
TAMMY
Last check in: +0.2 ETA: +0.3.5
MCCONNEL
What was the signal strength at that range?
TAMMY
Strength is 96.7, but static can only filter 23.4, so it's marginal but still within safe limits.
MCCCONNEL
Monitor it, will you? I know you will, even so, if it gets to 88.9 or lower call until this is done. Follow emergency standard order 14 (c) until further notice.
MCCONNEL
But COMS...
TAMMY
Yes, Fleet Captain.
MCCOONELL
This may be an emergency, but those still apply, and though you’ve got interrupt authority. Don’t think for a microsecond that you have carte blanche to abuse it, got it?
TAMMY
Understood Fleet Captain.
Within an hour, the shuttle carrying the rescue party docked with the Prince.
Opening the main hatch of the Prince, amid near-total silence. The scene was one of total blackness. The beams of the flashlights showed condemnation drips on the walls and bulkheads; there must be total power failure aboard.
The magnetic boots of the rescue party were the only thing preventing them from floating around; the artificial gravity system aboard the Prince had failed.
Things were unusually quiet on board. Where had her crew gone? Were any still alive, and if so, what condition are they in?
SEARCH PARTY LEADER 
'SR-07 to Star Raptor: actual rescue party aboard, AG and power systems offline, oxygen levels marginal but sufficient for life, no sign of crew at this time. So far, there is no evidence of structural damage—no scotch marks or carbon deposits. According to my reading, there was no visible fire!
MCCONNELL
Star Raptor Actual, SR-07' Roger, search, lead, deploy personnel at your discretion, and keep COMS open.
There was a howl on the COM channel that was barely discernible.
MCCONNELL 
Star Raptor Actual, SR-07' Roger, search, lead, deploy personnel at your discretion, and keep COMS open.
MCCONNELL (CONT'D)
Star Raptor, this SR-07 signal strength is -0.3. Over.
At that moment, the COMs between the Prince and the Star Raptor went completely dead.
Aboard the Star Raptor, Communications Specialist Tammy tried to regain contact but couldn't for five minutes.
MCCONNELL 
We've lost the Prince report," Fleet Captain McConnell said.
TAMMY
That problem we had before we put out the static that cleared. Well, it's back worse than ever, captain!
MCCONNELL
Bridge acknowledges
MCCONNELL (CONT'D)
First Officer Ammerson 
AMMERSON
Aye
MCCONNELL
I'm going to find out what the hell is happing over there, per fleet standing order 16you have the con...and don't break my ship
AMMERSON
Captain I must protest 
MCCONNELL
Noted now I'm going over.
AMMERSON
Aya captain
McConnell headed down to the launch bay, where a team of three Star Raptor Rescue Specialists would accompany her. They were experienced and capable. It was a risk she was willing to take. 
She was willing to trust her own judgment, as she had done many times before, but she was nervous about what they'd find over there, and Captain McConnell would do everything she could to ensure that this was not shown to her crew.
She had to get up to the bridge to check the ship's systems and make sure everything was in order.
McConnell and her team headed out onto the flight deck.
When she arrived, the rescue team was suiting up. McConnell made sure the pressure suits were locked down, and then she joined them.
MCCONNELL 
Is everything ready?" Captain McConnell inquired.
SPECILIST
Yes, ma'am, we're ready to go,
SHUTTLE PIOLET 
Everything ready Captain we a claered to lurnch.
The Star Raptor's launch doors opened. 
MCCONNELL
Lema-221. Pre-Launch Cheek Operations Complete.
SHUTTLE PIOLET
Thank you, Captain, It feels so good to be back in the air.
SHUTTLE PIOLET (CONT'D)
We are going for luach at this time, over.