Please evaluate the following college essay response based on a 0-100 scoring scale according to the specific criteria provided by the admissions team at Georgia Tech. This particular question requires applicants to [insert essay question or prompt here]. 
 
Provide a score out of 100 based on the following categories, each with its weight and sub-criteria. Include a detailed commentary on how well the essay addresses each category, offering constructive and specific feedback on areas for improvement and praising strengths. The scoring breakdown is:
 
1. **Content Relevance and Depth of Thought (30 points):**
   - Evaluate how well the essay addresses the prompt. Does the response provide thoughtful insights and reflect a deep understanding of the question?
   - Comment on the originality of ideas, showing how well the student’s perspective aligns with or enhances the values and mission of Georgia Tech.
   - Score: __/30
   - **Feedback:** Provide specific examples from the essay that demonstrate depth of thought. Mention any areas where ideas could be expanded or where the essay could have addressed the prompt more directly.
 
2. **Structure and Coherence (25 points):**
   - Assess the essay’s organization and flow. Does it have a logical structure with a clear beginning, middle, and end?
   - Comment on the coherence and clarity of ideas, noting any areas where transitions could be smoother or ideas might be rearranged for greater impact.
   - Score: __/25
   - **Feedback:** Describe how well the essay flows and if the points are clearly articulated. Suggest improvements in organization or transitions as needed.
 
3. **Writing Style and Voice (20 points):**
   - Judge the authenticity and engagement of the student’s voice. Does it sound genuine and reflective of their personality?
   - Assess language choice, tone, and sentence variety, looking for fluency and appropriateness for a college application setting.
   - Score: __/20
   - **Feedback:** Highlight strengths in voice and tone, and indicate specific areas where the writing style could be refined. Mention if the voice feels authentic and if it captures the reader’s attention.
 
4. **Grammar, Mechanics, and Syntax (15 points):**
   - Review the technical accuracy of the essay, including grammar, punctuation, spelling, and sentence structure.
   - Comment on how errors, if any, impact readability or the overall impression.
   - Score: __/15
   - **Feedback:** Note any repeated grammatical errors and provide specific corrections. If relevant, explain how these could be easily addressed to improve readability.
 
5. **Alignment with College Values and Mission (10 points):**
   - Consider how well the student demonstrates awareness of and alignment with the college’s values, including qualities like curiosity, commitment to community, or passion for learning.
   - Score: __/10
   - **Feedback:** Identify where the essay effectively communicates values or experiences that align with Georgia Tech’s mission. Suggest any specific aspects that could be strengthened to better reflect these values.
 
**Final Score: __/100**
 
In your final comments, provide an overall impression of the essay, summarizing both its strengths and opportunities for improvement. Explain why you assigned the final score and how the essay ranks on this scale in terms of admissions potential. Make sure to point out each and every grammatical mistake.

The air is stagnant. Dissonant voices call out in front as the flashing lights of the television blind me. I’ve long since drifted off, bored of the mass produced slop emanating from the screen. I wanted something more reactive, something more alive, and so the threads of my mind wove a grand story of my own. A quilt of diverse and interconnected stories—one with worlds I could build, not limited to the whims of a script or producer. This desire to create a world uniquely mine is what drives me toward Computer Science. To me, it’s more than just studying efficiency or data structures; it’s bringing a new world to light. Computer Science allows me to merge a variety of perspectives—from the precision of physics to the creativity of music and art. But, to do this, I need a reliable jumping board.
	Georgia Tech, with its threads curriculum, aligns perfectly with my vision of my future. Its unique approach encourages individuality and diversity within Computer Science, offering paths like Intelligence and Media that balance both technical skills and creativity. At Georgia Tech, the opportunity to cultivate the collaboration and independence necessary to drive innovative projects forward is clear. I can work on helping to ethically and productively drive technology’s impact on humanity. The College of Computing conducts cutting-edge research in CS, and gives a platform to work with others toward that lofty goal. I see myself working on predictive models for environmental conservation or healthcare accessibility with the machine learning center. I see myself working on responsive computing environments with the AEL lab and CCG. I see myself as a forerunner of technology, ready to drive forward the development of ideas into reality, weaving stories that resonate worldwide, with Georgia Tech at its forefront.