Rewrite this essay: "At the start of the play, Benedick and Beatrice detest love and marriage, which is shown in their witty banter and mutual mockery. “I had rather hear my dog bark at a crow than a man swear he loves me” (Act 1, Scene 1, line 129-130). Beatrice’s remark shows her resistant view on romantic love and foreshadows her witty banters with Benedick. Another example of this is when Benedick says, “Shall I never see a bachelor of threescore again?” (Act 1, Scene 1, Line 195-196). Benedick’s dislike towards marriage matches with Beatrice’s views and shows his bachelor status as a part of his identity. Beatrice also takes part in this mockery, saying, “He that hath a beard is more than a youth, and he that hath no beard is less than a man” (Act 2, Scene 1, Line 36-37). Beatrice’s association of beards with manhood displays her witty attitude and hints at the social constructs she will challenge.
	As the play progresses, the manipulation by the other characters begins to erode the facade of resistance that Benedick and Beatrice have constructed around themselves. “I did never think to marry: I must not seem proud, happy are they that hear their detractions and can put them to mending” (Act 2, Scene 3, Line 230-233). Benedick’s self-justification reveals a crack in his resolute bachelorhood when he hears his friends discuss Beatrice’s supposed love for him. Upon hearing Benedick’s supposed feelings for her, Beatrice says, “What fire is in mine ears?” (Act 3, Scene 1). Beatrice’s astonishment at overhearing her own fabricated love story exemplifies the beginning of her transformation driven by overheard gossip. Back to Benedick, “When I said I would die a bachelor, I did not think I should live till I were married” (Act 2, Scene 3). Benedick entertains the notion of marriage, signifying a pivotal shift in his perspective prompted by perceived external affection.
	The conclusion of the play reinforces the triumph of love and companionship, as Benedick and Beatrice openly accept each other, symbolizing love’s ability to conquer fixed attitudes. “Peace! I will stop your mouth” (Act 5, Scene 4). Benedick's playful declaration, sealed with a kiss, captures the moment of their mutual acceptance, showcasing their transformation to lovers from sparring partners. “Thou and I are too wise to woo peaceably” (Act 5, Scene 2). This insightful admission by Beatrice to Benedick aligns with their character’s intellectual compatibility and mutual understanding, transcending earlier contentions. “Serve God, love me, and mend” (Act 5, Scene 4). Benedick, once a critic of marriage, embraces his role as Beatrice’s lover, highlighting a complete reversal in his previous convictions." to match this criteria: "Organization			
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