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Good morning Ian, I trust that you are doing well and hope you are in good cheer!
Thank you for affording me the opportunity to correspond with you transparently, I would also like to thank you for your time and effort walking with me thus far. Please bear with me with this writing as it will be a merger of formal and informal matters with the aim of painting the bigger picture with a possible practical transition and solutions. This Sunday I came to the realization that everything in my life is currently in a space where a staggered approach is already in motion or about to be launched, thus giving me the following idea. 
The Informal; 
I engaged with Robbie over the weekend and propose the following solution for my migration from PA Butchery to the Brewery. I will be available for 2-3 Hours per day (5 days per week) working at the Butchery. The balance of my time I will spend at the Brewery with the aim to get familiarized with the processes, production, marketing, and staff amongst other things. I will furnish both you and Robbie with a fixed schedule to ensure that there is synergy and rhythm (as you might have picked up - I'm quite habitual). The spin-offs;PAB; I will be bartering with Robbie; My services at the Butchery in return for free accommodation. Robbie's own planning will upgrade (he needs this and it will force him into position).I will be off PAB's payroll (this is very important due to PAB's poor cash flow).The staff that I trained at PAB will still have support from my side and it's important that they also move in their positions and take up the responsibility at hand (my support is imperative - a swing through)Little Brew; a staggered approach should give the Brew staff confidence and affords me the opportunity to further build a solid healthy relationship with them.As mentioned it will also afford me the opportunity and space to focus on the Brew and to get familiar with the processes among other things. The Butchery is a busy environment and focus is always scattered (although I get things done while still building structures and processes). A Staggered approach should also strengthen our (already) trusting relationship going forward. With this said I do believe that I will need your Wisdom and understanding of the business and pending deliverables like the BAS show for instance (not to burden you, but to tap into).         3. Proposed Little Brew deal for the next 6 months (Starting 1 July - 31 Dec)4-5 Hours per week working at the Brew including Saturdays & Sundays to go check on the product Brewed.  I'm currently drawing 12.5k from the Butchery and if it's possible would like to start off with the same amount from the Brew if the budget allows it. I know things are very tight everywhere and fully aware that it's a big ask. Further, I propose a sliding scale for remuneration from 12.5k limited to 25k per month. The balance over 12.5k should be driven by sales with the access allocated towards the Brewery to service a downpayment agreement. A vehicle at the moment is a big headache and would like to ask if it will be possible to use the NP200 of the Brew? I do around 400 - 600 km per month and it's basically the school run, shopping, Gym, and work. If any other travels are coming up I will check this with you before utilizing the NP.        4. Cashflow & Budget for the Brew Ops; I think it is imperative that I start working on this as soon as possible (June) in order to gain an understanding of the Brew's breakeven, fixed, and variable expenses. A light Budget for a Marketing Plan needs to be drawn up including possible rebranding or fine tweaks to the current products to be sold under a new name like a Lager etc - we can further discuss this as the current names and Branding should remain with some additional new products. I will also look at a Pot set up to cover our running expenses also integrating a savings plan for the staff (300k). To clarify I would need time to find a solution here - I truly believe that the staff and IP sitting with them are not replaceable and part of the deal. I would actually prefer if they would walk this road with me as I have spent time with them and feel there is a good synergy between us. As mentioned the time at the brew will greatly avail time for me to also look at a permanent agreement going forward and includes the Staff and process of structuring a win-win deal for both of us (I honestly think you will be able to do this better than me). 
The formal; (we can take our time with this; June - Dec)

Financial Due Diligence: This includes reviewing the company’s financial statements to determine its profitability, growth potential, and any outstanding liabilities or lawsuits.Legal Due Diligence: This involves reviewing the brewery’s legal documents, such as its licenses, permits, contracts, and leases.Operational Due Diligence: This involves reviewing the brewery’s production processes, distribution channels, sales techniques, and marketing strategies.Human Resources Due Diligence: This involves reviewing the brewery’s staffing, employees’ experience and other related information.Environmental Due Diligence: This includes reviewing the brewery’s compliance with applicable laws and regulations regarding environmental laws and regulations.Reputation Due Diligence: This involves researching the brewery’s reputation in the industry and among consumers.Inventory Due Diligence: This involves reviewing the brewery’s inventory, including raw materials and finished products.Future Potential Due Diligence: This involves reviewing the brewery’s future potential for growth, expansion, and development.
For your record I met Richard at the Butchery yesterday and shared some of the content of this email with him, the man is a good soundboard and basically involved in both the Brew and Butchery. He was very positive about the proposal and mentioned that he would be even more happy if I'm also at the Brew for his stock control. He is also in agreement that I should partially stick with PAB in order to bring security and upgrades with management etc. 
I thank you for reviewing and affording me an opportunity Ian, I'm very excited about the new journey should we be able to come to an agreement. 
Kind regards and all the best in JHB! Hope to see you soon.