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Study Plan
Dear Visa Officer,

To address the denial of my initial application for a Canadian study permit, my mother has written an explanation letter as well as provide further information and documents regarding my family’s financial situation. It was determined by the previous visa officer that my parents’ assets and financial resources were insufficient to support my study plan in Canada, leading to the conclusion that my application was not intended for temporary study.

I would like to clarify that my study plan to Canada is indeed a temporary one. As a Sales Director of Jinan Meide Casting Co., Ltd., my mother has been leading her team to expand markets in North America, Europe, and Southeast Asia for years. Busy with her work, she seldom has time to accompany me. But her efforts are paid off because the company has been developed into a Top 500 Private Enterprises in China’s Manufacturing Industry. She used to talk to me about the difficulties she met during the process, and according to which I have concluded that better international marketing capacities might help her achieve success easier. My mother’s challenging but colorful career has always inspired me. As her son, I do hope to go beyond her in the future in the field of global business and have been determined to concentrate on international marketing by studying the Bachelor of Business Administration program.

Why Canada and Simon Fraser University
I have chosen Canada and Simon Fraser University for several reasons. Through my mother’s personal travels and business contacts with numerous countries like US, Canada, Germany, Denmark, Greece, Poland, Sweden, Thailand, Mexico etc., we have come to trust the North American education system in Business Administration. Canada’s social security and reasonable tuition fees are more appealing to me than those in the US. Being named as the No. 1 of Canada’s Top Comprehensive University by Maclean’s University Ranking, Simon Fraser University is well known for innovation and entrepreneurial spirit. Its Beedie School of Business always adapts teaching to market changes, ensuring me to learn the knowledge and skills that the market needs. This close application of learning is what I desperately need for future career development in China.

Study Plan at Fraser International College and Simon Fraser University
Honored to receive the combined admission letter from Fraser International College and Simon Fraser University (FIC, SFU for short), I have paid the 1st-year tuition fee in full to FIC. Also, I have accomplished the first preparation for studying at FIC by achieving Duolingo 85, and will start studying the Cornerstone University Transfer Program (Stage II, UTP II for short) in Business Administration at FIC in Sep. 2023. Completing it with a CGPA of 3.2 will enable me to start Year 2 of Bachelor of Business Administration (BBA) at SFU in Jan. 2025. The small-class education of UTPII is relatively simpler and easier to adapt and more helpful to lay better foundation for my academic study in SFU. In the BBA at SFU, I will learn to apply big-picture thinking to real-world business problems. In addition to extend my learning beyond the classroom through case learning, I can tailor my learning with the choice to pursue more than one of its nine areas of concentration in my final two years. I will extensively utilize the library, lectures, and other resources to support my academic development.

Career Plan after the BBA at Simon Fraser University
After completing the study in Canada, I would return China immediately to look for a job as an international marketing professional. Under the contraction of global trade demand, China’s exports are being challenged in various ways, such as declines to the European Union, the United States, and Japan. Under such circumstances, international marketing professionals like me, who have received systematic Western education on business administration, familiar with North American business operations and cooperation models, and have in-depth knowledge of North American culture, will play an important role in China’s efforts to strengthen its market development and stabilize its exports to developed economies. I aim to join in one of the medium-sized enterprises in China to assist in its development by promoting its overseas market in North America. I am sure to have a bright future by contributing to the development of China. As the only child of my parents, it’s my duty to return home to take care of them since they are getting older with my growth. I sincerely look forward to your approval.

Thanks & Regards!

Applicant: Zang Yizhi
Aug. 3, 2023