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FADE IN:
EXT. HOPE CITY - DAY
A sprawling metropolis blends NATURE and SCIENCE. SOLAR PANELS glisten
atop futuristic structures as ACADEMICS bustle along. A CACOPHONY of
URBAN LIFE fills the air.
A DIGITAL BILLBOARD cycles through the city’s LATEST DISCOVERIES in
GENETIC ENGINEERING and CLEAN ENERGY.
SWIFT PAN TO:
INT. GENEsis LAB - CONTINUOUS
The camera settles on ED KAYNES (30s), a BRILLIANT SCIENTIST at the
forefront of a groundbreaking experiment. He works intently, a messiah
of MIRACLES yet to come.
ED
(to his TEAM)
Science today gives shape to tomorrow’s reality. Let’s push
boundaries.
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EXT. HOPE CITY - NIGHT
As dusk falls, the heartbeat of the city slows. ED and MARIA, his life
PARTNER, step into the WARM EMBRACE of twilight, secrets of their
research a SHADOW DANCE behind them.
They share a TOAST in the quietude of their abode, a fleeting calm
amid a LOOMING TEMPEST.
MARIA
A toast to our love and the dawn of a new era in science.
Their KISS seals the vow, an ECHO in the void, a prelude to the
TURMOIL ahead.
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[Note: This condensed rewrite focuses on highlighting the contrast
between the protagonists’ academic life and their personal bond.
Dramatic dialogue, bold capitals, and tense transitions are designed
to fit industry-standard screenplay formatting for a one-page script
in a LETTER-size document. Subsequent scenes should maintain narrative
tempo and character depth, ensuring a gripping experience.]
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - ED’S LAB - DAY
The hustle of SCIENCE CITY fades into the hushed hum of the lab. ED
KAYNES, mid-30s, a devoted scientist, scribbles fervently. SURROUNDED
by beeping machines and his diligent TEAM busy at work.
ED
(to himself)
The breakthrough we’re on… it’s unprecedented.
MARIA, Ed’s better half and research powerhouse, observes a white rat
through a glass enclosure, her face lit by the GLOW of progress.
MARIA
(looking up)
It’s remarkable, Ed. You’re on the cusp of changing everything.
Ed’s eyes never stray from the task at hand, his deep focus
symptomatic of the lifelong quest that burns within him.
ED
(filled with anticipation)
Once we crack this code, immortality won’t be myth; it will be
SCIENCE.
MARIA approaches with a tray of SYRINGES, each containing a glowing
liquid.
MARIA
(holding up a syringe)
This could be it, the key to life eternal.
ED takes a syringe, veins coursing with adrenaline, as he administers
the injection.
ED’S TEAM lean in, their collective breath held. The rat stirs, its
chest rising with potent vitality.
TEAM MEMBER #1
(excited)
It’s like witnessing the dawn of a new age, Ed!
APPLAUSE breaks out. Ed and Maria share a moment of TRIUMPH — their
dedication morphing into reality.
ED
(his voice rising above the applause)
To science! To endless possibilities. To us!
Maria squeezes his hand tightly. NIGHT FALLS, and they head home,
unaware that their breakthrough grants not just life, but an
unfathomable curse.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis CONFERENCE HALL - DAY
A fully packed auditorium watches in rapt attention as ED KAYNES, mid-
30s, a VISIONARY of science, stands proudly before his PEERS and
MEDIA, presenting the miraculous result of his team’s work—a
revitalized, energetic white rat encased within a glass enclosure.
The room erupts in OVATION as ED beams at the SUCCESS, looking over to
where his wife and research partner, MARIA, claps enthusiastically
among the crowd. Their eyes lock, a silent acknowledgment of the
ripple they have created in the fabric of science.
ED
(over the applause, to the audience)
Today, we stand at the cusp of a revolution—a breakthrough that could
render aging obsolete. We’re rewriting the narrative of human life!
MARIA
(beaming, as she navigates closer, to a colleague)
This is more than an experiment—it’s a peek into a future graced with
the gift of unending youth.
The crowd buzzes, their excitement a palpable force as the
implications of Ed’s revelation dawn on the scientific community
gathered there.
AN AUDIENCE MEMBER
(yelling over the chatter)
Dr. Kaynes, what ethical considerations have been addressed here?
ED
(grasping Maria’s hand as she joins him on stage)
We’re not just scientists; we’re stewards of humanity’s future. This
is about enhancing life responsibly.
Their embrace, a fusion of personal and professional triumph, is a
powerful image against the backdrop of incredulous faces and flashing
cameras—a promise made manifest under the bright lights of progress.
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INT. ED AND MARIA’S LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
A cocoon of warmth envelops ED and MARIA as they STEAL away from fame
into their sanctuary. Awards and articles fill the room, humble BRAGS
of their intellect now bystanders to their intimacy.
Ed, a bastion of brilliance outside, now just a man enthralled by a
simple toast with his wife. The night’s silence, an accomplice to
their SOLITUDE, nods in approval.
MARIA
(teasing as she uncorks the wine)
To us, beyond the science and the spotlight.
The GLASSES chime, a symphony for two. Laughter mingles with music—a
rare cadence of careless joy in their orchestrated lives.
ED
(his eyes alight with untold devotion)
To the miracle of you, the REAL discovery of my life.
They dance, bodies in SYNC, hearts even more. A love born of shared
dreams, now a private rebellion against the world’s PACE.
MARIA
(her voice a whisper, but her words strong)
Tonight, let’s just be us—no titles, no future… Just Ed and Maria.
The record player spins, the needle drops, and the melody wraps around
them—a tender shroud against the MORROW’S uncertainty.
Their embrace lingers, a silent promise that here, in this moment,
love is their ONLY TRUTH.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - ED’S LAB - NIGHT
The LABORATORY lies in silence, SHROUDED in darkness. Suddenly, an
ALARM BLARES, a piercing sound that rips through the quiet. MONITORS
burst into life, illuminating the panic within.
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MONITOR FOOTAGE
A white rat, previously SUBJECT to an experiment, STIRS in its cage.
What was ONCE DEAD now WRITHES BACK TO LIFE, its eyes glowing with a
PERVERSE LIGHT.
EDWARD “ED” KAYNES (mid-30s), watches from a REMOTE LOCATION, his eyes
widening in HORROR.
ED
(into phone, voice trembling)
Alert the team… It’s the rat… It’s RESURRECTED.
He’s met with a CHORUS OF DISBELIEF from the other end.
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SECURITY FOOTAGE
The creature ESCAPES its confinement, its movement unnatural and
frenzied. The haunting sequence foreshadows the IMPENDING STORM.
BACK TO:
ED, a manifestation of DESPAIR and DREAD. He knows they stand on the
brink of CATASTROPHE.
The CAMERA ZOOMS IN on the rat as it disappears into the LABORATORY
MAZE, an ominous prelude to chaos.
ED
(shouting into phone, panic-stricken)
GET TO THE LAB! Now!
The laboratory is a maze, a chamber of SECRETS and now TERROR. The
ticking clock is evident, with every second leading them closer to
DISASTER.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LAB - RESEARCH FLOOR - DAY
The bustle of SCIENCE CITY fades into the focused HUM of GENEsis Lab.
EDWARD “ED” KAYNES, mid-30s, a VISIONARY in a white lab coat, strides
past HIS TEAM engaged in the intricate ballet of RESEARCH and
development.
The walls tell stories of BREAKTHROUGHS; patent plaques and
photographs capture moments of GLORY as they triumph over nature’s
riddles.
ED
(to the TEAM)
Prepare the PROTOTYPE! We’re making history with every test!
MARIA, Ed’s WIFE and colleague, adjusts her MICROSCOPE, the digital
display beside her alive with PROMISING GRAPHS and images of
rejuvenated cells.
MARIA
(impressed)
Eternal life’s in reach, Ed. It’s miraculous.
Their exchange, an intertwining of the personal and monumental,
resounds within the lab’s sterile walls, reminiscent of the SUBTLE
CLINK of test tubes and distant HUM of machinery.
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EXT. SCIENCE CITY - MONTAGE
Drive, PASSION, and ambition FILL the city as GENIUSES both young and
old RACE to unearth the next frontier. A panoramic display of HUMAN
DRIVE pulsating against the civil backdrop.
INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - MAIN HALL - DAY
ED, the RESEARCH TEAM flanking him, commands attention with his
magnetic PRESENCE, anticipation THICKENING the very air.
The research team, AVATARS of dedication, man stations that buzz with
expectancy, all eyes upon Ed — the MAN of the hour.
ED
(soaring with confidence)
Prepare for revelation, everyone. Our vision, our reality!
INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - PRESENTATION ROOM - DAY
Before the ABUZZ AUDIENCE, Ed declares confidently, the fated moment
upon them. Their SYMPHONY of discovery, to be shared with the world,
lies moments ahead.
ED
(prelude of a hero)
Ladies and gentlemen, to the dawn of a new world unbowed by time!
The crowd is rapturous, minds set ablaze with the IMMINENCE of a new
ERA. An illustrious day on the scientific calendar UNFURLS before
them.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LAB - R&D DEPARTMENT - DAY
The LAB buzzes, a cacophony of SILENCE and SOUND. ED KAYNES, mid-30s,
navigates the TEAM with a focused GAZE, each move ECHOING the
steadfast beat of DISCOVERY.
The room is a tapestry of motion — scientists pouring and mixing
SOLUTIONS, the CLINK of glass, and the WHIRR of machines like a choir
of PROGRESS.
ED
(to the TEAM, authoritative)
Today, we make leaps, not steps. Let’s ensure our NAMES go down in
HISTORY.
MARIA, his PARTNER, studies a cell under a microscope, her expression
that of a HUNTER spotting their prey.
MARIA
(intense, updating Ed)
The CELL’S REGENERATION is hitting MARKS we didn’t dare to forecast.
A triumphant ENERGY sweeps through, the glint of victory in their
eyes, their minds mapping the borders of TOMORROW.
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INT. GENEsis LAB - HALLWAY - DAY
ED strides with PURPOSE, his STEPS a DRUMROLL to their unveiling.
Maria catches up, FALLING into STEP beside him, her eyes a REFLECTION
of shared ANTICIPATION and apprehension.
MARIA
(slight trepidation)
Is everything READY for the BIG REVEAL?
ED
(confident, determined)
We’re set. Science and SAGA merge today. The DAWN of man’s hope!
Team members peek from doorways, their looks cast towards Ed — the
BEACON of their COLLECTIVE aim.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - PRESENTATION ROOM - DAY
Doors open to a FILLED room, their entrance a FANFARE to the
POSSIBILITIES they’re about to present.
ED
(rousing the crowd)
With every second we unveil MYSTERIES once bound to THE REALM OF GODS!
APPLAUSE resonates, vibrations of edge of what’s to come. Maria and
Ed, CENTER stage, the PULSE of a RENAISSANCE.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - LOBBY - DAY
The spacious lobby awaits, bustling with the pre-event RUSH.
Scientists and REPORTERS shuffle about; the air vibrates with
ANTICIPATION. Ed’s TEAM ensures everything is PREPARED for the BIG
REVEAL.
In strides MARIA KAYNES, a picture of poise and intelligence. Her eyes
shine with EXCITEMENT as she greets GUESTS at entry.
MARIA
(to guests, welcoming)
Welcome all! A remarkable day awaits us.
Dr. KIM, seasoned GENETICIST, approaches, her status in the community
UNDENIABLE.
DR. KIM
(sincere)
Maria, your work is awe-inspiring!
Their LAUGHTER mingles with the surrounding CHATTER, the festive
spirit UNCONTAINABLE.
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A private alcove, where two FIGURES discuss in hushed tones. Their
silhouettes BEAR witness to the DEPTH of their conversation.
FIGURE ONE
(concern apparent)
This could CHANGE everything, for better or worse!
FIGURE TWO
(substrate of doubt)
The ETHICS, though—what are we UNLEASHING?
Nearby, MARIA and DR. KIM nod. Their confidence BELIES the
UNDERCURRENT of uncertainty.
MARIA
(to Dr. Kim)
Indeed, a door to the future is OPENING.
Dr. KIM
(appraising)
And it is YOU and ED who have found the KEY.
The conversation is INTERRUPTED as an ASSISTANT approaches, urgency
written across his face.
ASSISTANT
(interrupting, anxious)
Dr. Kaynes, the audience is seated, waiting.
MARIA
(acknowledging)
Thank you, we begin shortly.
She EXCUSES herself, making her way towards the podium. Her step
carries the WEIGHT of their work, the silent HOPE of the gathered. The
audience whispers GROW LOUDER in her approach.
MARIA’s voice ECHOES off the grand walls,
MARIA
(in mind)
This is the moment everything changes.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - PRESENTATION HALL - DAY
The hum of the CROWD subsides as EDWARD “ED” KAYNES commands the
STAGE, exuding a presence that captivates the AUDIENCE. The room
buzzes with anticipation, every eye and lens trained on him.
ED
(with gravitas)
Ladies and gentlemen, today we stand on the brink of a new frontier in
science. Our breakthrough isn’t just an advancement—it’s a leap into a
future where age is but a number, a mere footnote in the annals of
time.
A collective INTAKE OF BREATH fills the room as the CURTAINS draw
back, revealing a display showcasing a previously aging rat, now
VIBRANT, defying its biological clock.
MARIA, Ed’s wife and partner in SCIENCE, beams with pride from the
crowd, their shared journey REACHING its zenith.
DR. HELEN KIM, prominent in the scientific community, feels the WEIGHT
of this moment, the potential UNFOLDING before her—HOPE and
POSSIBILITY colliding in the air.
ED (CONT’D)
(emboldened by the awe)
We herald a new era—a time of boundless POTENTIAL, where the shadow of
mortality fades before the LIGHT of knowledge. The FUTURE is brighter
because of our invention. The cradle of eternal youth lies within our
grasp.
APPLAUSE floods the space, echoing off walls that have heard countless
THEORIES and seen countless tests but nothing quite like this. Ed and
Maria EXCHANGE a look that says it all—a mix of TRIUMPH and
TENDERNESS.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - PRESENTATION HALL - DAY
A HUSHED AUDIENCE clings to EDWARD “ED” KAYNES’ every word as he
UNVEILS the cornerstone of scientific PROGRESS—a rat, PHOENIX, once
aged, now VIGOROUS and youthful.
ED
(excitedly to the crowd)
Behold PHOENIX, a leap beyond nature’s design, showcasing our “Elixir
of Life”!
The HOLOGRAPHIC DATA SCREEN comes to life, chromosomes TWISTING and
SPLICING into a DANCE of IMMORTALITY.
MARIA KAYNES, proud and strong, holds HIGH the vial containing the
elixir, the AUDIENCE’s eyes wide in AMAZEMENT.
APPLAUSE and CHEERS resonate, a CHORUS of PROGRESS and HOPE echoing
far beyond the walls.
ED (CONT’D)
(booming over the noise)
Today, we turn the page, facing tomorrow’s SUNRISE—timeless and
untamed!
CLOSE-UP on their TRIUMPHANT LOOKS as they stand at humanity’s new
dawn, bound by LOVE, PURPOSE, and AMBITION.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - PRESENTATION HALL - DAY
The gathered AUDIENCE waits in anticipation as EDWARD “ED” KAYNES
addresses the crowd with a CONFIDENT smile. The spotlight is on him,
illuminating both the MAN and his MISSION.
ED
(grinning wide)
Thank you all! ETHICS in science is our compass—steering the ship of
discovery in RESPONSIBLE waters.
A HOLOGRAPHIC DISPLAY of “Eternal Life” shines behind him, drawing
GASPS from the room. DR. ABBOTT rises from his seat, his voice filled
with CONCERN.
DR. ABBOTT
(loudly)
Ed, what about the ETHICAL weight of eternal YOUTH? Are there
SAFEGUARDS?
The audience leans in, their curiosity a RIPPLE through the silence.
ED
(nodding, reassured)
Dr. Abbott, an ETHICS BOARD and strict policies are our GUARDIANS.
We’re working hand in glove with POLICYMAKERS—society remains our
PRIORITY.
REPORTER (from back)
Poised, professional.
What of inequality? How will the ELIXIR be ACCESSIBLE?
MARIA KAYNES, Ed’s pillar, steps forward, her voice a BEACON of
MORALITY.
MARIA
(determined)
Our VISION is global GIFT, not a privilege. FAIRNESS is the bedrock—
SECURITY and RISK management our CONSTANT allies.
BIOETHICIST (from left)
Poignant, pressing.
Is there a cost to the fabric of SOCIETY? UNINTENDED consequences?
ED
(firm, leader-like)
Certainly, we tread with CARE on this voyage of the unknown. Our aim
is to protect life, not ALTER the course of NATURE.
APPLAUSE erupts around them, the sound of SOLDARITY and SUPPORT. Ed
and Maria, united, reflect a FOUNDATION of SCIENCE and HEART.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - RECEPTION HALL - EVENING
The grand reception hall EMANATES elegance under the glow of
CHANDELIERS. A well-dressed crowd MINGLES, celebrating the
groundbreaking presentation of ED and MARIA. To a background of
clinking GLASSES and sophisticated CONVERSATIONS, ED, bespectacled,
and Maria, draped in grace, stand as the event’s CENTERPIECE.
CHANCELLOR WEST, respected in academia, approaches with a firm
HANDSHAKE.
CHANCELLOR WEST
(to Ed, with GRAVITAS)
Remarkable, Ed! The city’s abuzz with excitement.
ED
(humbly proud)
It’s teamwork, Chancellor. Coming together for a breakthrough.
Maria nods in AGREEMENT, a proud smile spreading across her face.
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A private alcove casts shadows on a DEBATE between DR. ROSENBERG and
MS. SHARPE, a discussion etched with CONCERN and ETHICAL weight.
DR. ROSENBERG
(concerned)
The box is opened… can they now control what spills forth?
MS. SHARPE
(intellectual poise)
Profound implications. Only time will reveal if their AMBITION
precedes CAUTION.
ACROSS THE ROOM
Ed and Maria are locked in lively discourse with YOUNG INVESTORS,
spreading EXCITEMENT about their research while REMAINING grounded in
their ethical RESPONSIBILITIES.
MARIA
(to investors, reassuring)
Our work dives deep. It touches the future with a REQUIRED MORAL
compass.
YOUNG INVESTOR #1
(toasting, enthused)
To a NEW AGE! An era defined by your vision!
GLASSES RAISE, a symphony of HOPE and PERSPECTIVE. Ed catches Maria’s
gaze, their mutual INTENT pushing past the room’s collective BUZZ.
They are the guiding force behind humanity’s LEAP into the unfolding
future.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - MARIA’S OFFICE - NIGHT
The stillness blankets MARIA’S office, the city skyline beyond glazed
in night’s embrace. MARIA, a silhouette against the window, her mind a
maelstrom of thoughts, contemplates the magnitude of the day’s events.
The door EASES open; ED enters, pauses, then softly closes it, sealing
away the clamor of their triumphant evening.
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CLOSE ON MARIA’S face, the city lights cast shimmering TEARS upon her
cheeks.
MARIA
(Voice quivering with emotion)
Today was extraordinary, Ed. But I feel unease… Like being on the cusp
of a precipice we can’t see.
ED approaches, encircling her waist with his arms, a gesture that
FUSES their strength and resolve.
ED
(embracing her, comfortingly)
Today, we stepped into the unknown, trusting in our work, in
ourselves. Fear is the echo of our responsibility.
Now entwined, ED and MARIA gaze upon the city—as vibrant as their
aspirations, as precarious as their CREATION.
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TWO-SHOT - ED, chin on MARIA’S shoulder, they stand as mend to the
LUMINOSITY of their victories and their VULNERABILITIES.
ED
(whispers, a trail of assurance)
The future rests in our vigilance. With every gift of science,
UNFETTERED, comes the GUARDIANSHIP of its implications.
MARIA, turning, her eyes LOCKING with Ed’s; their faces the MIRROR of
courage, love, and MUTUAL DETERMINATION.
MARIA
(Gently, eyes unraveling fears)
Dreams realized could turn NIGHTMARISH. Together, we hold the JOY of
discovery and the burdens it may warrant.
ED
(nods, earnestly)
Side by side, WE endure. Our LOVE, an unwavering anchor against the
tempests that may RISE.
Their lips MEET in a PROMISE-FILLED kiss, an everlasting moment amidst
the shadows of uncertainty and the glow of assurance.
FADE OUT.
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - LATE NIGHT
The lab’s hum has QUIETED. ED and MARIA lock away secrets that sing of
MANKIND’S POTENTIAL, their hands lingering on the power switches.
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EXT. GENEsis LABORATORY - NIGHT
The building’s stoic facade echoes the closing of a pivotal chapter.
As Ed and Maria’s car blends into the NIGHTSCAPE, their silhouettes
speak of burdens BORNE and HOPES kindled.
MARIA
(whispers in the peace of departure)
The decisions we’ve made… they’ll define us, Ed.
ED
(voice laden with conviction)
The journey we’ve embarked on— it’s RIGHT. Our reasons are JUST.
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EXT. ED’S HOUSE - BACK PORCH - NIGHT
A PLAINTIVE symphony of nighttime AMBIENCE cradles Ed and Maria as
they stand beneath the cosmos. The FLICKER of candles is a testament
to their enduring bond.
MARIA
(voice edged with trepidation)
This tranquility…
May it shield us from the GALE that awaits.
ED
(embracing her, a bastion of SOLIDARITY)
Together, we are an UNBREAKABLE force against the tempest’s FURY.
Their union, forged in the CRUCIBLE of science and love, remains
UNWAVERING under the stars that judge in silence.
FADE OUT.
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INT. ED AND MARIA’S CAR - NIGHT
The silent murmur of the city fades as ED and MARIA’s car glides
through the night, a sanctuary from the world. They laugh and joke,
the air filled with the electric buzz of their SUCCESS.
ED
(eyes twinkling with mischief)
To think, we’ve unlocked the secret to eternity.
MARIA
(her voice lilting, playful)
Just another day at the office for the Kaynes duo.
Their car pulls into the driveway, the engine purring to a halt. The
night’s embrace cocoons them, a momentary pause in the relentless
march of their lives.
ED
(softly, as they sit in the car)
This is it, our leap into the unknown. Our work—our love—could change
everything.
MARIA reaches out, her hand finding ED’s in the darkness. A silent
connection that speaks louder than words—a promise of unity against
the shadows they’ve cast.
MARIA
(squeezing his hand, earnestly)
No matter what tomorrow brings, we face it together, Ed. Side by side,
come what may.
The LIGHTS from their house beckon, a warm glow against the dark, an
anchor amidst the storm of change they’ve set in motion.
ED
(grasping her hand, conviction in his voice)
As long as we have each other, Maria. We can face eternity.
Their doors open, and they step out into the night, hand in hand—their
bond a beacon against the uncertainty that awaits.
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INT. ED AND MARIA’S HOME - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
The room, bathed in WARMTH and soft candlelight, whispers romance. ED
and MARIA, entwined on their sofa, are islands amid a sea of chaos.
Their conversation is intimate, a DEFIANT DECLARATION against the
pressure of their own breakthroughs.
MARIA
(her eyes sparkling with love)
To think… we’re on the precipice of ETERNITY.
ED
(matching her intensity)
With you, every DISCOVERY, every risk is worth taking. Our PASSION
fuels more than just science.
Their glasses CLINK, an ACCORD struck not just to their UNION but to
the paradigms they dare to shift.
ED
(with a rare earnestness)
Against the vastness of TIME, it’s US, together. Locked in step
against the depths of the UNKNOWN.
Their embrace is the EPICENTER of the room. Any DISTRACTIONS, the
awards, the accolades, recede into insignificance against their shared
moment.
MARIA
(repoising with a soft fierceness)
As long as we STAND together, no MYSTERY too vast, no challenge too
daunting.
Their kiss marks an EPOCH – an ERA of their own making. They stand,
the architects of a future written on their terms.
FADE OUT.
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INT. ED AND MARIA’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
The STORM outside casts a sharp silhouette on the steamy WINDOWS.
RAINDROPS patter rhythmically against the GLASS, complementing the
PASSIONATE SYMPHONY from WITHIN.
Ed and MARIA’S LOVE overflows; a TANGIBLE ENERGY undulates through the
AIR as LAYERS OF CLOTHING fall away like petals. Now BARE to each
other and the WORLD, they find TRUTH in the touch of SKIN on SKIN.
They SINK into the CARNAL EMBRACE, BODIES ENTWINED in the timeless
dance of DESIRE. MOONLIGHT streams through the WINDOW, casting ghostly
RAYS over their MELDING FORMS.
A profound INTIMACY fills the ROOM as a SERIES OF DELICATE MOANS, and
WHISPERS CRESCENDO with the increasing FERVOR of the NIGHT.
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Adjacent Frame: GRAPHIC DETAILS OMITTED. Passion-filled SILHOUETTES
imply their RISING DESIRE.
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The CAMERA pans to the SECURITY FOOTAGE on their LAPTOP, UNNOTICED in
their RAPTURE. The RAT, lifeless in its CAGE, suddenly CONVULSES. Its
DECEASED FORM twitches, resurrecting into a GHASTLY VERMIN gnawing at
reality and reason.
The RAT’S maligned RESURRECTION unfolds clinically, STARK against
their NATURAL HUMANITY. It begins to BATTER against the confines of
its GLASS prison with AWAKENED FEROCITY, signaling the start of a
RELENTLESS PLAGUE.
BACK TO ED AND MARIA:
Their UNION, though BLURRED in the SHADOWS, remains the FOCAL POINT.
But the STORM outside picks up its PACE, LIGHTNING ILLUMINATING the
BACKDROP of their PASSION and the IMPENDING DREAD that brews UNSEEN.
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EXTERIOR SHOT: The RAT’S FIGURE, now SINISTER and FRENZIED, ESCAPES
into the swirling MAELSTROM, finding its way to the HEART of an
UNEXPECTING CITY.
CUT TO:
The BEDROOM builds to a PASSIONATE ZENITH. In the FLICKERING LIGHT,
TWO SOULS ENTWINED seem untouched by the LURKING TERROR.
FADE OUT.
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INT. ED AND MARIA’S BEDROOM - NIGHT
The bliss of sleep is shattered by the relentless RINGING of a phone.
The serene sanctuary where ED and MARIA rest, shattered by the
intrusive sound.
MARIA, groggy and disoriented, nudges ED, who mumbles a protest,
desiring nothing more than the warmth of their sheets and the comfort
of their embrace.
MARIA
(mumbling)
Ed… the phone.
ED, reluctance etched onto his face, finally gives in to the
relentless tone.
ED
(sighs)
All right… all right.
Grasping the phone, he speaks, his voice heavy, laden with a night of
passion and rest now interrupted.
ED
(into the phone, groggy)
Hello?
An URGENT message detonates through the SPEAKER. A COLLEAGUE’s voice
rife with panic and fear frays the edges of their peace.
COLLEAGUE (V.O.)
(with desperation)
Ed—The TEST SUBJECT! We’ve lost control—it’s all gone wrong!
Blood drains from ED’s face as shockwaves ripple through his very
being, his mind struggling to comprehend the GRAVITY of the situation.
MARIA interprets ED’s shocked demeanor, alarm radiating like the
growing storm outside.
MARIA
(with rising urgency)
Ed, what is it? What’s happened?
ED’s eyes widen with the knowledge of what his confirmation will
unleash, the storm outside a mere echo of the CHAOS about to unfold.
SMASH CUT TO BLACK.
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INT. ED’S LABORATORY - NIGHT
The silence of the lab is shattered as a SECURITY ALARM blares.
Emergency lights flicker on, casting an ominous glow across the chaos
of the once pristine workspace. Papers are strewn across the floor,
signs of a hasty evacuation.
SECURITY MONITOR FOOTAGE
An alarmingly still, white rat suddenly convulses to life. Its
awakening is sudden, eyes glowing with a newly-found, unnatural
energy.
SECURITY GUARD
(calling out into the phone, voice frantic)
Code Red! The subject… it’s not dead, it’s—
ED KAYNES
(interrupting, his tone urgent)
Activate the lockdown protocol, NOW!
The guard nods, steeling himself for the task as chaos erupts outside
the confines of the secure room.
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TIGHT ON MONITOR - RAT’S ENCLOSURE
The creature, once a herald of scientific breakthrough, is now a
harrowing testament to the disastrous turn their work has taken. It
gnaws at the enclosure, a terrifying force unleashed.
BACK TO ED
ED stands in his remote viewing room, the light from the monitors
painting his face with the intense realization of the NIGHTMARE their
discovery has birthed.
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EXT. LABORATORY GROUNDS - CONTINUOUS
The undead rat finds its way through a barely-ajar window, its escape
silent yet foreboding—the first ripple of the impending pandemic.
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INT. ED’S LABORATORY - NIGHT
The security guard hits a RED BUTTON, engaging the containment
protocol. He knows the THREAT that looms large—what began in their lab
now spills into the world.
The lab, once a beacon of hope, now ground zero for an apocalypse
never foreseen.
FADE OUT.
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INT. ED AND MARIA’S BEDROOM - LATE NIGHT
The persistent RINGING of the phone shatters the silence. ED, drowsy
and disoriented, reluctantly picks up.
ED
(groggily)
Hello…?
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INT. GENEsis LABORATORY - SECURITY ROOM - NIGHT
Amidst the cacophony of ALARMS, DR. LAURA STEVENS, a fellow scientist,
delivers frantic news over the line.
DR. STEVENS
(voice frantic)
Ed, it’s chaos here. The test… it’s turned into an outbreak!
MARIA awakens, her eyes wide with fear.
MARIA
(to Ed)
What is it, Ed?
ED
(sitting straight up, urgency in his voice)
It’s gone wrong at the lab. We have to go. Now.
Without hesitation, ED and MARIA spring into action, ready to confront
the unfolding nightmare.
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EXT. SCIENCE CITY STREETS - DAWN
Their car speeds through the abandoned streets as dawn breaks over a
city teetering on the brink of disaster.
Inside the car, ED and MARIA exchange a look of resolute
determination.
MARIA
(steadfast)
We will contain this.
ED
(with a grim nod)
Together, always.
As they race towards the GENEsis LABORATORY, the sunlight struggles
against the growing shadow of catastrophe enveloping the city.
FADE OUT.
END OF PAGE 20 OF 150