use the following quotes "as is" into the essay and create a new essay following the guidelines of the existing essay, the new essay must follow these instructions:

INSTRUCTIONS
Introduction (question, sources, thesis statement) 
1.	Body Paragraphs (3) 
 Begin with a topic sentence 
 Explain the topic sentence 
 Provide evidence from the text
Analyze evidence 
Make Connections 
Conclusion 
Reiterate your thesis statement 
Summarize your argument 
2.	Topic Sentences
They argue rather than report. 
They show the relationship of each paragraph to the essay's thesis and tell your reader what to expect in the paragraph that follows.
Topic sentences elaborate the essay's thesis to a reader 
They reveal the main argument of a paragraph
Topic sentences are also useful diagnostic tools to the writer—they let you know if your thesis is arguable and how your argument is shaping up.
3.	BODY PARAGRAPH
Each body paragraph is an elaboration of a part of your thesis statement. It consists of 
Claim sentence (which is the part of the thesis statement which this paragraph will deal with).  
Evidence for the above claim in the form of a quote from the texts under discussion. 
There is particular way in which quotes are supposed to be used – 
Introduce the Quote – Set up the context for the quote to come in. 
Place identifying markers  - Name of the author and Title of the text (if not provided before) and any other information which may help the reader locate the quote. 
Quote itself – In double quotes, and with page numbers. 
Analyse the Quote – Close read the quote and make it work for your argument.
use the above instructions to edit a provided essay along with its critiques

essay question:
Why are nation-states concerned about security, territory and populations? 
QUOTES
"For example, a poem about 'our nation' published in a Tamil textbook a few years after Indian independence includes a framed map of India as well as a picture of a young boy gazing at it" (Ramaswamy, 100).
McKean (2002) describes the inclusion of a big map of India on the bottom floor of the shrine as a monument to the value of culture in building a nation's identity and  security
"The bottom floor of the shrine has both a statue of Mother India and a big map of India with mountains and rivers, key Hindu pilgrimage sites, and "all important cultural centres" (Ramaswamy, 112(McKean,269).
"From the 1920s onwards, the map of India becomes a regular feature of Mother India's iconography because it facilitates her presentation to the viewing public as a goddess of territory and polity." It also helps to distinguish her against the plethora of other Hindu goddesses--Durga, Lakshmi, and others--with whom she may otherwise be confused. It is because Mother India was created as a territorial deity throughout the twentieth century." (Ramaswamy, 103).
“The joint parades orchestrated by India and Bangladesh along the border, to the tune of a rebel Bengali poet” (Sur,35)
“Felani narrates south Asia's complex games of territoriality and links Bangladesh's troubled geography with Assam's postcolonial history. As India and Bangladesh orchestrate joint parades (á la Wagah) along a border that was never a conventional war theatre (ironically to the tune of a rebel Bengali poet) we are reminded once again that this border rests on uneasy friendships. Sadly, we are also compelled to acknowledge that activism often fails to cross constituencies and borders in south Asia.” (Sur,35).
“Bangladesh's troubled geography with Assam's postcolonial history.” (Sur, 35).