Directions: Write your body paragraph and use the color-coding outlined below. Then, choose one specific thing that you would like feedback on in your paragraph.


Write one specific question or aspect of your paragraph that you want feedback on below:




 Body Paragraph (ICEE Paragraphs)

1. Topic sentence (introduces one of the supporting reasons)
2. Prepare your reader for the evidence. Explain the context (I in ICEE)
3. Introduce evidence (identify source, provide context) (I in ICEE)
4. Quote/paraphrase/summary—THIS IS EVIDENCE (C in ICEE)
5. Document the source (MLA in-text citation) (C in ICEE)
6. Commentary (interpret, explain, discuss) THIS IS ANALYSIS (E in ICEE)
2. Prepare your reader for the evidence. Explain the context (I in ICEE)
3. Introduce evidence (identify source, provide context) (I in ICEE)
4. Quote/paraphrase/summary—THIS IS EVIDENCE (C in ICEE)
5. Document the source (MLA in-text citation) (C in ICEE)
6. Commentary (interpret, explain, discuss) THIS IS ANALYSIS (E in ICEE)
7. End of paragraph connection back to the thesis

Type your paragraph here:





Use the text below to write a paragraph according to the instructions above


Your initial opinion on the issue: School should start later to endorse better mental health and performance in students.



Table #1 (Source from Gale, Ebsco Explora, or Ebsco Academic Search Premier)
MLA 9 Citation (QUICK TIP: for Gale, find this by scrolling to the bottom of the article, for Ebsco click the “Cite” button on the right column & scroll to find MLA 9 option)

Meltzer, L. J., Shaheed, K., & Ambler, D. (2016). Start Later, Sleep Later: School Start Times and Adolescent Sleep in Homeschool Versus Public/Private School Students. Behavioral Sleep Medicine, 14, 140-154. doi: 10.1080/15402002.2014.963584
Argument: School should start later to improve the sleep and overall health of adolescents.
Claims:
1. Early school start times are associated with insufficient sleep and negative outcomes.
2. Delayed school start times have been shown to improve sleep duration and cognitive functioning.
3. Homeschooled students, who do not have to wake early for school, obtain more sleep than public/private school students.


Evidence:
1. Research has shown that inadequate sleep negatively impacts cognitive functioning, emotion regulation, and health (Beebe, 2011; Drake et al., 2003; Fallone, Owens, & Deane, 2002; Galland et al., 2012; Gibson et al., 2006; Gradisar et al., 2011; Nixon et al., 2008; Sadeh, Gruber, & Raviv, 2002).
2. Studies have found that delayed school start times result in longer weeknight sleep duration, less sleepiness during the day, and improved academic functioning and attendance (Danner & Phillips, 2008; Edwards, 2012; Owens et al., 2010; Wahlstrom, 2002; Wahlstrom et al., 2014; Wolfson et al., 2003; Wolfson et al., 2007).
3. Homeschooled students, who do not have to wake early for school, obtain 49 minutes more sleep per night on weekdays than public/private school students (Meltzer, Shaheed, & Ambler, 2016).


Quote 1 you found useful: “Insufficient sleep duration in adolescents is common, negatively impacting cognitive functioning, emotion regulation, and health… One factor that contributes to insufficient sleep in adolescents is the intersection between early school start times and delayed bedtimes related to physiological changes to the circadian rhythm, as well as academic and social demands.” (Meltzer et al., 2016)
Quote 2 you found useful: “A number of studies have shown the benefits of delayed school start times for both middle and high school students…Other outcomes include better attendance, less tardiness, improved health and mood, and fewer drowsy driving accidents.” (Danner & Phillips, 2008; Owens et al., 2010; Wahlstrom, 2002; Wolfson et al., 2007)
Quote 3 you found useful: “Without the early wake times required to catch the bus or get to school on time, homeschooled students (grades 6–12) averaged 49 min more sleep per night on weeknights…This resulted in 4 hours of additional sleep for homeschooled students.” (Meltzer et al., 2016)