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Subject: Reconsideration of Study Permit Application

Dear Visa Officer,

I am writing to express my deep disappointment and request a reconsideration of my recent Study Permit application refusal. The reason provided, stating that I do not have significant family ties outside Canada and that the purpose of my visit is not consistent with a temporary stay, is unjustified. In this personal statement, I will provide evidence of my significant family ties in China and explain how the purpose of my visit to Canada is consistent with a temporary stay. 

Firstly, the visa officer stated that I do not have significant family ties outside Canada. However, I would like to emphasize that my family ties in China are indeed substantial. As the only child of my parents, I am their main source of emotional support. They have invested in my future by purchasing properties on the two campuses of Xinjiang Normal University. For the two houses in Wenquan Campus of Xinjiang Normal University, House-1 using teacher preferential policies is for their own living and House-2 bought as a marriage asset for my future. Moreover, my parents have a smaller property House-3 on the Old Campus of Xinjiang Normal University, which is located in a highly sought-after school district. They intend for my children, their future grandchildren, to attend the renowned primary and secondary schools nearby with House-3. To further solidify our family ties, my parents have also acquired a villa in the scenic South Mountain of Shuixigou Town, where we can spend quality time together during holidays and enjoy the beauty of nature. These investments clearly demonstrate my family’s commitment to our shared future in China as well as the strong family ties that exist and the commitment to support each other in the long run. 

Additionally, the purpose of my visit to Canada is entirely consistent with a temporary stay. My grandmother was a teacher, and my mother, influenced by her, became an excellent college teacher. It is through their inspiration that I have set my career goal to become a college teacher of English, specifically focusing on improving English language education in China’s multi-ethnic regions such as Xinjiang. I have personally experienced how the low level of English education hinders minority students from entering developed regions for higher education. My intention is to improve this situation and help Chinese minorities have the opportunity to see the world, promote cultural understanding, and contribute back to the development of the western region. Both my mother and I envision a future where I can work at the Xinjiang Normal University, where she has been working and where I have also interned. Considering the university’s requirements for educational background and overseas experience, I have already obtained my undergraduate degree from a prestigious university in China. Pursuing a Master’s degree overseas will give me a competitive advantage and improve my overall qualifications for working in Xinjiang Normal University. Hence, studying abroad at this stage was the initial intention behind my decision. 

Therefore, I have chosen the University of Windsor’s M.Ed.-Second Language Acquisition in Culture & Society program (MED-SLACS) to enhance my qualifications as a teacher and acquire the necessary expertise in second language acquisition. My completion of the English Improvement Program (ELIP) with a score of 83% further demonstrates my commitment and readiness for this program. My undergraduate studies in philosophy and psychology have developed the necessary skills and a strong foundation in various areas of education for me. 

My decision to study in Canada, particularly at the University of Windsor, is based on careful consideration. Initially, our options included Japan, the United Kingdom, Canada, and the United States. However, my mother strongly opposed me studying in Japan due to her personal experience of not being able to utilize her Japanese language skills upon returning to China. Therefore, she advised me to choose an English-speaking country. Although the UK is renowned for its education system, it is often regarded as having “easier” master’s degrees in China labor market, leading us to dismiss this option. When comparing the United States and Canada, we considered factors such as tuition fees and living expenses. Ultimately, Canada’s reputation for prioritizing education internationally, along with its favorable living conditions, made it an ideal choice. The University of Windsor’s innovative curriculum, esteemed professors, and focus on second language acquisition will equip me with the necessary skills and knowledge to achieve my career goals. Additionally, the university’s commitment to international student experiences and its multicultural environment will provide me with invaluable opportunities to develop a global perspective and enhance my cultural and linguistic responsiveness. Choosing the University of Windsor and Canada is a well-thought-out decision based on their academic reputation, affordability, and the safe and supportive study environment they offer.

Upon completing the MED-SLACS program, I will return China to fulfill my career goal of being a college teacher of English at Xinjiang Normal University. My aspirations align with China’s efforts to open up its western region, led by the “One Belt, One Road” policy. I firmly believe that my expertise in Second Language Acquisition and my understanding of cultural and societal influences on language acquisition will be invaluable within a multi-ethnic context like Xinjiang. I am dedicated to improving English language teaching in the region and providing opportunities for Chinese minorities to engage with the world. Furthermore, my intention is to eventually work at Xinjiang Normal University, where my mother used to work and where I have also interned. My family desires that I have a prosperous career and a fulfilling life, and they hope that I will be able to support and care for them in their old age. By pursuing a master’s degree in Canada, I aim to enhance my qualifications and gain international experience that will ultimately benefit my future career in China. Furthermore, due to my familial responsibilities and the desire to support my parents, establishing a long-term career in China has always been my ultimate goal. Therefore, my intention to study in Canada is genuinely temporary and aligns perfectly with the purpose of a study permit.。

In conclusion, I strongly believe that the refusal of my Study Permit application was based on inaccurate assumptions about my family ties and the temporary nature of my visit to Canada. I have significant family ties in China, demonstrated by my parents’ ongoing support, investments in properties for our future, and their desire for close familial relationships. Furthermore, my purpose for studying in Canada aligns with a temporary stay as I aim to enhance my qualifications as a teacher and make a meaningful contribution to education in China’s multi-ethnic regions. By granting my Study Permit, I will have the opportunity to study at the University of Windsor, acquire the necessary skills and knowledge to improve English education in China’s western region, and ultimately contribute to both my family and society. I sincerely hope for a favorable decision that would allow me to pursue my academic and career goals in Canada.

I kindly request you to reevaluate my case and grant me the opportunity to pursue my studies in Canada. Your favorable decision will be highly appreciated, and I assure you that I will adhere to all the terms and conditions set by the Canadian government. 

Thank you for your time and attention.

Yours sincerely,
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