this is the transcirpt of the carol which i want you to read and understand first then i will provide you the paragprah which need to be edits as per carol requreiments :This call is now being recorded. Okay, let's just get into the feedback for chapter number six so I can get this fixed for you ASAP. Okay.

There's a lot. I have pages of stuff. It's Maury Povich somewhere in.

Not in this chapter, but further back. A friend of mine brought to my attention that I need to announce that he's a talk. Talk show host in case people don't know because of generation gap.

Okay. And then when she mentions cancer, it's cervical cancer. She first says cancer and then cervical, so I guess it could slide.

I wanted her to know that when the doctor talked to me. She's a really staunch woman's right activist. LG.

LG. LGBTQ. You know, she's a lesbian.

She's a really strong boy. She's very bossy. And that did not come across at all.

Okay. And then when she said that they leisurely went to lunch, they didn't leisurely go to lunch. The doctor told them, this is going to take hours.

Go to lunch and come back. Okay. He wrote in.

She wrote in there that there were sons. It was only a son. I had no chemotherapy.

I had steroid use. And what happened with the steroid use was I got weight gain. My breast huge.

My stomach got huge. My husband at the time, Fausto, was uninterested in me because of the weight gain that wasn't talked about. She called doctor every attar doctor, Robert.

She called doctor code doctor. Whitman. There's no such thing.

Do not call doctor. She said, whitman, whose code? Do not call him Mister Donut. That's not funny.

That's not my sense of humor. I don't make fun of people, okay? He does. He doesn't like cookies.

He likes sweets. And Nancy and Susan are not a couple. They're lesbian friends that are co workers.

Okay? Okay. The doctors had a steady flow of business, but my schedule was booked out for months. Hmm.

And, uh, she had all other information that they had, you know, smatterings of. Of clients. That's not even true.

I didn't even put that in my book. Um, she said, I specialize in services. One of the serv.

The biggest service I specialize in is acne. So that was entered in there. Um, she.

The whole story about Paolo, she has completely incorrect to reread my book and rewrite that she left out the whole part, that when I met him, we were at Sagrada family church, and then I traveled the rest of the day throughout Barcelona and went back to my hotel and then called him and he said to me he was still at Sagrada family and that he was there with two other women. And I was trying to clarify, are you single or are you with other women? And he's like, no. Single.

That's when I asked him if he wanted to go to dinner, to dancing, for a drink, and he said, everything. And he said, but I'm lost. He goes, I don't know where my hotel is, because in Barcelona, they make you give back the key when you leave the hotel.

So he didn't have the write down of which hotel he was in. So then I said to him, meet me at my hotel, homemade hotel. Balmay's.

The corner of Balmay's in Mallorca. And he goes, Mia, that's the hotel I'm in. And I couldn't believe it.

In all of Barcelona, we were in the same hotel and one floor apart, she missed the whole story. Yeah. She didn't write about how I was.

She wrote about how I was working three days a week in New York, but she didn't say how the four days a week were spent in Barcelona. I'm sorry, in Italy, traveling all over. And she didn't talk about how it was a six and a half hour flight, New York to Milan, and that I was back and forth for two and a half years.

She did, like, two paragraphs. Apollo. And it was two and a half years.

Yeah. And we went to new areas, different regions of Italy. I was able to travel all over with him.

She didn't talk about any of that. I mean, that was two and a half years of my life then. I can't even read my own handwriting.

I have to go to the thing. Hold on. Where's Paulo? Let's see.

I wrote not. I can't hold on. There was no rivalry between me, Nancy and Susan.

They were under me, but they just did small things to undermine me all the time. There was no rivalry. I was well over them.

They're just an office manager and a back office manager. It was never amusing how they acted. And she wrote that they, while initially amusing, it began to wear on me.

It was never amusing. And there was no toxicity in the workplace. None at all.

So there's several paragraphs that she's got to correct that. And then when she said, I went to these three places, I never went to Tokyo, I never went to Sydney. Why would she put places I've never been to.

I've been to Paris, I've been to London, I've been to Amsterdam, I've been to Switzerland. I've been to the Caribbean. Those are legitimate places I've been to.

Don't put. Don't make things up for places. Winnie, stop it.

Hold on one moment. I'm sure it's my cleaning lady. Yeah, sorry about that.

No problem. Nowhere in there does she talk about my ups and downs of drinking. And that's a big part of the story.

I would have periods of time where I take 90 days off, but then I'd go right back to drinking. And that was a constant back and forth, back and forth. And it's not layered in the story at all.

Then she writes about a guy named Luca. There is no Luca in my life. It's completely made up and fabricated.

Okay. I dated a guy who was a Ford model. It's written in the book.

His name was Lee. It went on for eleven and a half years. All this talk about Lewis Luca and his presence brought a new level of happiness.

Supported my ambitions. No, we didn't plan trips together. We didn't blend our love and travel.

No. Then she doesn't talk about. The grand opening was on January 21 of the skin laser rejuvenation.

And then further down, she talks about skin, about Chelsea eye. Chelsea eye is all together. And then it goes, skin laser rejuvenation.

Nothing's in order. Then she starts talking about me as you and your. And it's talking in a third person.

I'm talking the whole story as I'm telling the story. And when I opened the new skin laser rejuvenation, she's saying how great it was. It was great for a couple months.

And then the stock market crashed. She doesn't talk about the whole period. What made me successful was groupon.

She skipped over that entire. I mean, she. She needs to go back and reread before she puts this together.

Yeah. Okay. Then she says Hertz's age.

It's not true. She was in her late sixties. She put that the nun was in her sixties.

I didn't even address the nun except to say that this little nun came over, picked up the. My thrown umbrella and held it over us while I was performing medical care. So why is she talking about a nun? I have no idea.

And Hertz's age was in her late sixties and she said she was 28. And what else? It just jumps all over the place. The whole part about Japan.

And it says, I need, or somebody else needs flowers. I need flowers to bring to the room. And she talks about the hospital.

It's completely incorrect to the story that I wrote. And then when her husband calls me Hartwig. He found out later.

I found out later about the necklace being worth six figures, not right then and there. And Hartwig's personality is a very gentle, calm, professional businessman. So how she said he spoke completely incorrect when she didn't talk about how when Herta was in the accident, she was talking about the black building.

When I go to the. To their house for brunch, I go into the black building. We need to talk reference that.

That black building was what she had told me in the accident. She didn't mention that then when it was Billy's wedding. It's got to be me.

They're saying that she. My mother called my sister Carol, but the writer is not realizing it's me, not Carol, somebody else. My sister.

My mother, who's still wasted in on drugs, is calling my sister Carol when it's Amy. Totally missed that. Then she writes, pauline, a cousin.

Pauline, is the babysitter from the beginning of the story. And there's no transition. When it goes three years, there's not even spaces for new paragraphs, and there's just no transition at all.

It's like talking about one thing and talking about another. And then, like I said, she talks about Chelsea eye again. Well, then there's no skin rejuvenation.

Skin rejuvenation comes after Chelsea eye. Then she writes, paramedics. They weren't paramedics.

I had a fire department across the street. They were firefighters. When they talk about Kylie, it doesn't say how I got off the plane and went straight to toys r us and got toys for her because her father had died and I got her.

I wanted her to specifically talk about my little pony because that was the conversation that me and Kylie, his daughter, had, who was young. She's, like, skimming over things that are, like, paragraphs and paragraphs long that need to be developed. The inaccuracies.

This scares me so much. I literally feel sick from this. Blake.

I think sometimes it does. Like, there are deliveries that end up not touching the mark, because I remember the feedback that Atlas gave me for chapter five was really good. And these are just things that I'll get you.

Well, I made a lot of changes to chapter five to make it good. Okay. Okay.

Then chapter six went really awry, and I still haven't had the rewrites of the changes I asked to have made. And I still don't have a flow chart of the. Forward to the chapter one, to the chapter two, to the chapter three, to chapter four, to the chapter five.

I've been asking for that. I still haven't gotten that. And I want to make sure there is a slow, because things are just cut off and they're not developed.

I can't produce this. And I was looking for further development. But the inaccuracies is really what is scaring me.

And adding to stories, characters that don't even belong and different characters names, and then you revert back to using their real name. I don't get it. She was pushed, clearly, and she lost track of the characters.

And things are not in chronological order now. And she didn't talk about how the stock market crashed my business. Washington fledgling due to the fact that all these people moved out of New York because the stock market crashed.

And what made it come back was a combination of two things. Was Loren Santo Domingo writing me up in vogue and being featured in Groupon, where I made $83,000 over the course of two or three days with the sales. So I had over, I forget how many right now because I'm so frustrated.

I had, like, 900 new clients. 800 new clients. She's not even talking about a major thing in my career.

And she talks about me training other estheticians. I never trained other estheticians. I'm making major money.

Why would I train, you know, other people off the street? I understand it's on Friday. It just made for a really long weekend, and I've been waiting to talk, but this is, this. This chapter is really bad.

It's all over the map, and I don't know what happened, but I'm really concerned. I'll get this. We'll get this fixed for you ASAp, Carol.

Okay. Thank you, Blake. No problem.

Is there anything else I can help you with? No, not now. Just send me them in order as soon as you get them. Yeah.

So what I'm going to do is my targets for you are two separate channels. The first channel is getting the revisions on this sorted out completely, and then forward to chapter five, getting you their entire layout formatted and sent. All right.

All right. There's got to be flow, and she's got to read my. What I wrote and not divert, and she's missing big gaps.

I mean, that whole story about Paolo. You have no idea how many people in New York were, like, blown away by that story. They're like, write a book just about that.

What is the chances? And if all of New York City, Queens, Brooklyn, and you turn out to be in the same hotel one floor apart. Yeah. And he was lost, literally, without his belongings, nothing.

He was completely lost, gave over that whole thing. Didn't talk about. She did Paolo, like two little paragraphs.

I was two and a half years with him. He was winning and dining. Me shopping in Milan, getting Gucci.

I mean, she just writes Gucci and food, comma, comma, that's not developing a story. I just don't know what to say. We were on a roll up until five, six, just completely.

At least with five, we could go back and layer in there. All the ups and downs of me drinking, not drinking, me getting healthy, me going, reverting back. That's part of the whole story.

Because I was numbing my pain. I'm working on other clients that are. I'm working on clients.

I'm absorbing. I'm an empath. I'm absorbing all their drama.

It was a heavy job for me to do. I think these kind of things happen in the process. We've made brilliant progress in terms of just getting to a good flow with chapter five.

This is just a speed bump. I can completely understand your concern. This is your life.

You feel like, you know, something's alright and something's awry. And I can understand the anxiety that's causing you. But we're gonna get all of this fixed for you.

This is part of the process. Nothing is, you know, nothing just goes straight. Especially when we're dealing with.

But I just don't like stories made up and characters not the same. That's just starting to get nonsense. That's just lunatic, crazy stuff.

Of course. Okay. That's what's more upsetting to me.

And she never wrote about Lee, who I dated for eleven and a half years. He ended up coming out to Phoenix and he's the one who told me to go on a dating site. And three days later is when I met my husband.

Okay, so he's a very important part. Nobody named Whitman. Nobody named Doctor Robert.

Okay. Yeah, no, I completely understand. Thank you for being open with me and honest with me about all these problems and I'll get them fixed for you ASAP.

Thank you. Bye bye. Okay, bye.