Here is my introduction to my essay on "Don't Read The Comments":

Topic Sentence: (1 sentence that helps to identify what your essay will be about, without using the words “In this essay, I will argue…”)

Despite it being 2025, sexism and racism are still big problems in the gaming world, making it hard for many people, especially women or colored people to be treated fairly and respected.

Context: 2 sentence that is a brief summary of the short story. Include the name of the story and the name of the author in this sentence)

In “Don’t Read The Comments”, Divya is a popular female gamer and streamer who faces sexist and racist harassment from online trolls. More importantly, she falls victim to the Vox Populi, a group of trolls who threaten to leak her apartment address and later on, harass her in real life with a goal of kicking her out of the gaming community. This story details how she is treated unfairly because of her race and gender, and how the gaming industry can be unfair to women.

Thesis: (your main argument, the exact same words that I approved in your outline)

Eric Smith shows that racism and sexism is still very much present in the gaming industry because Divya is treated unfairly at her booth, women are missing from important panels about them and people like Chad, the GamesZone employee, make sexist remarks about female gamers/streamers.

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And here are my 3 arguments, more in detail:

Argument 1

Divya shows disappointment on the quality of her booth when she says, “I keep an eye out for the number and letter combination that Rebekah
gave me for where our booth is sitting. Well, more like a table. We’re
situated somewhere near the Artist Alley, with a bundle of other speakers
and indie artists.” (Smith, 288) Her comments on the poor setup and the fact that she is located among indie artists show that she could likely not be valued as much by the people in charge of GamesCon, which could be from the hate she is receiving for her gender and race.
Argument 2

Aaron gets upset when he looks at the GamesCon panel about women in games and says, “There are a few other streamers on the panel with her, and it’s in the morning on the Friday of the convention. I can’t help but scowl at the list of panelists, considering it’s supposed to be a discussion about women in games and it looks like D1V is the only woman on the thing.” (Smith, 261) Aaron is upset because the panel is supposed to be about women, but there is only one woman on it. This shows that even when they talk about women, they don’t include many of them, which is an example of how women are still treated unfairly in the gaming industry.
Argument 3

Chad, the GamesZone employee, talks badly about D1V when he says, “That streamer chick isn’t even that hot.” (Smith, 259) He also says people made up all the bad things happening to her and that she doesn't really care about games. Later, he says, “If any of that nonsense that happened was real… I think those chicks deserve it.” (Smith, 259) This shows that a lot of people in the gaming industry don’t take women seriously, which proves sexism is still a huge problem.


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I need you to write a 1st body paragraph for argument 1:



Body Paragraph #1			/7

Topic Sentence: (1 sentence that explains what you will discuss in this paragraph, without using the words “In this paragraph, this will be discussed…”)



Introduce Quote (Context): (1-2 sentence that gives plot summary from the story, to help understand what your quote is talking about)



Quote: (rewrite the quote from the story here, word for word. Quotes should be 1-3 sentences long)

Analysis: (2-4 complete sentences of how this quote helps to prove your argument, and why it is good evidence to prove your point. This is the MOST important section of your essay!)


Concluding Sentence (1 sentence)