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Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

Since I have decided to publish my first novel, one question has haunted me can I really consider myself a serious author if I dont pontificate upon the act of writing? Clearly not, so I bring you, good writers of BMR, my own curated list of writing tips. Because, as it turns out, writing about writing is a delightfully meta way of procrastinating from actually finishing my novel. Now, I am certainly no expert. Clearly, I can barely differentiate between form and from, so feel to disregard my advice as it suits you. First things first. There is only one hard and fast rule when it comes to writing Anything is allowed, so long as it works. Now, does this mean that everything works in writing? Nope! How can a writer know if a technique worked? Well, this is subjective, but the best metric is whether or not the meaning is conveyed. If readers aren't coming to the meaning the author intended, then the technique didn't work. The sad truth is well written and engaging are not always one and the same. Some critically celebrated novels have incorrect grammar Cormac McCarthy's No Country for Old Men , James Joyce's Ulysses, William Faulkner's Sound and Fury . Some extremely popular novels are beloved by fans, even though they have technical and structural errors in the narrative. Once you understand how and why the rules work, you can use them to your advantage, to craft the story that is buzzing around your head. And you can even learn when to break them. Everything in this thread should be taken as suggestion. There is no one right way to write. If you are willing to listen to advice and experiment with new techniques, you will grow as a writer. I welcome any questions and comments in this thread, as well as suggestions for future topics. I honestly do know the difference, but my fingers are quite fond of typing form when I mean from, so it might seem to some that I don't. Last edited Sep 4, 2018
Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

Show, dont Tell This is some of the most basic advice new writers receive, and there is good reason for that. Using writing to show details to ones readers, instead of merely telling them those details is one of the greatest feats in literature. Showing, or using strong, vivid descriptions, turns dry, mediocre prose into living, breathing narratives. How is showing different from telling? Consider the following two sentences She was happy. Click to expand... She smiled. Click to expand... Now, the reader can infer from the second sentences that the character is happy. Still, lets see how we can take it further. She closed her eyes and a smile spread over her face. Click to expand... This sentence not only shows happiness, but shows a overcome with joy. Small details like bring stories to life. How to turn telling into showing? There are many techniques, but my favorite is to break down a larger action into smaller parts. Consider again the above example. Now, She smiled, is a way to show that a character is happy, but we can get into even greater depth. Break down the smile into even smaller parts. Lips curled and opened, revealing a row of perfect white teeth. A few short laughs escaped her mouth and her warm eyes didnt leave mine. Click to expand... How does this sentence show happiness? The smile, big enough to show teeth, the laugh, and the warm eyes. All of these images come together to create a scene that shows a characters happiness, rather than just tell it. So, do I have to show everything? Nope! See, here is the thing about words. At some point, to some degree, all words tell. If we want to communicate purely by showing, well, wed use pictures. Now, is it possible to use a great degree of detail in every aspect of writing a story? It is! But is it advisable? Probably not. Description is great, paints a picture for the reader, but too much description can slow your pacing down. There isnt a hard and fast rule for how much description is too much or just right, but a good way to think about it is to imagine description like a spotlight. The more you describe something, whether its a person, a place, an object, a fight, a conversation, anything really, the more attention you bring to it. Saving your beautiful descriptive language for important things will make them stand out in the readers mind. When is showing important? Characterization is one of the places where the effective use of showing versus tell will shine. Dont tell a reader that a character is a good fighter, show that the character is a good fighter. Show them winning their fights. Show them overcoming difficult odds. Dont tell me two characters are good friends, show me how they share inside jokes or how they support one another. Last edited Sep 4, 2018
Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

Monika's writing tip for the day
Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

Drunkle Qrow Heh, I've certainly never spent an entire weekend moping over a fictional couple. Nope. Adverbs What are adverbs? Adverbs are a part of speech that modify either a verb, an adjective or another adverb, commonly denoted by their -ly suffix. Contrast them with adjectives, which modify nouns alone. Why should adverbs be avoided? Adverbs are often a sign of telling when you should be showing. Consider the following sentence They kissed passionately. Click to expand... You are telling the reader the kiss is passionate when you should be showing them the kiss is passionate instead. Compare it to this Closing the distance between them, she kissed him. Hungry lips pressed against his and encouraged him to open his mouth to her tongue. Hands slid up his back, over his neck and gripped his head. Click to expand... Now, maybe you already built up the scene to be passionate, so there is no need to go into great detail about how the kiss is passionate. So why not use the adverb there? Because its superfluous. The reader already knows the kiss is passionate, because youve written a passionate scene. Now, how about when the verb and the adverb are at odds? Consider this She kissed him tepidly. Click to expand... Now, that is an interesting example. A reader doesnt expect a kiss to be tepid. Now, in this case, it still might be more interesting to show how the kiss is tepid their lips barely touched, she pulled away quickly, her mouth didnt open for his, but the pace of the scene will dictate how much detail you should go into. Adverbs arent terrible, but dont use them as an excuse not to elaborate. And if you are elaborating sufficiently, then you might not need them at all. Personally, I believe adverbs are more a second draft issue. I actually think writers should use them as much as they want in the first draft, because when editing, one of three things will happen Either the writer will see that they are using the adverb to tell, instead of show, and rewrite the scene to illustrate their point, using the adverb as a guide. The writer will see that they already built up the scene, and will be able to delete the adverb, without losing any meaning. The adverb is doing something interesting that cant be easily translated otherwise, and then the writer will keep it.
Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

Filter Words Continuing on the discussion of Show, dont Tell, today I will discuss filter words, and why you shouldnt use them. This is actually one of my favorite writing editing tricks, and even since Ive learned this technique, I personally feel like my writing has reached another level. What are filter words? Filter words are words that filter experiences through a character. Most of the sensory verbs are filter words, so see, hear, taste, smell, feel, and think are the big ones. Wait, I thought I was supposed to use sensory details in my writing? Yeah, you do want to use sensory details in your writing, but you want to avoid using sensory verbs. Confused yet? The problem is, when you filter the sensory details through the characters, you take the immediacy out of the scene, and detach the reader from experiencing the story alongside the characters. The important thing to remember is that you dont have to explicitly start that the character is experiencing a sensation. Just state that the experience is occurring. For example She smelled his body odor. Click to expand... In this situation, the sensation of body odor is filtered through the character, instead of presented directly. Now, while it might be nice to avoid the sensation of someones sweaty stank, this sentence doesnt immerse the reader in the characters experience. Contrast it with this His pungent body odor made Amy crinkle her nose. Click to expand... Now the reader is in Amys shoes, sharing in her experience. Many sentences with filter words can be rewritten to be more vibrant and immediate. Plus, I find they tend to be more interesting to write. Take this example. He heard her coming down the hall. Click to expand... Boring. Lets spice it up The clicking of heels on wood flooring announced her arrival. Click to expand... Look at that! Not only did I make the sensation more dynamic, I was able to fill in details about the setting and characters. I didnt have to tell you the character is wearing heels or the floors are wood, instead I wove the details into the narration.
Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

Connotation Denotation What are connotation and denotation? To start, lets define denotation, with is essentially the dictionary definition of a word. The literal meaning. Simple right? So, whats connotation? Connotation is the associations a word carries. These can change over time, and vary from place to place. The best way to explain it is through examples. He shrieked He bellowed Click to expand... Now, looking at the denotation of these words, they are synonyms, and mean essentially the same thing, He yelled. However, by analyzing the connotation, we can read between the lines and learn more about the subject. The verb used in each case tells us something about the man. In the case, shrieked, we get the image of a small man, lacking in power or strength. He comes off whiny, meek, pathetic. Without further description, we might imagine that he is slight, lacking the physicality to project with his voice. Compare this to the second example, bellow. This verb carries more weight, more strength. It conjures images of power, authority, and anger. Our minds may fill in a large imposing man. This is why you cant just blindly open a thesaurus and select synonyms at random. Even if two words mean the same thing, they can carry different connotations. She murmured is more intimate than She muttered. She giggled is more playful than she sniggered. Another example Forgive me Father, for I have sinned. Sorry Daddy, Ive been naughty. Click to expand... Going on denotation alone, the sentences are practically identical, but using connotation, we know one is a more or less sincere expression of religious piety, and the other is sexually suggestive. So, how can I use this in my writing? Overtime, using careful diction word choice you can create impressions in your writing. It adds to the exposition to create tone, demonstrate characterization, develop the setting and theme. Done well, and the reader will be enraptured. Done poorly, and the reader is taken out of the story, left befuddled. Honestly, this is one of the things that makes writing so difficult. Once you learn this technique, you begin the journey for the perfect word. You want the exact world that precisely encapsulated the mood you are trying to create, both in the definition and in connotation. Sometimes, youll find it, and life is wonderful. Often, it will elude you, and writing becomes a matter of settling. Try not to get hung up on the perfect word. Instead, this is the best place to bust out your clever metaphors and figurative language. If a single word doesnt fit, string together several, and illustrate your point, instead of merely telling it.
Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

Syntax Syntax is another word for sentence structure, or the way sentences are constructed. Lets talk briefly about different kinds of sentences Sentence A sentence or independent clause has a subject and a predicate verb phrase, and encompasses a complete thought. If you dont have all three elements, you have a sentence fragment, or a dependent clause. Complex sentence A sentence with both a dependent clause and an independent clause. Compound Sentence A sentence with two or more independent clauses, joined by a conjunction, or a semicolon. If you only use a comma, this is an error known as comma splice. Complex-Compound Sentence A sentence with at least two independent clauses and a dependent clause. Vary your syntax! Too many short, simple sentences makes your writing sound juvenile. Too many long makes your write difficult to parse or follow. Too many sentences of the same format, or too many sentences starting with the same word usually a pronoun become dull and monotonous. Anaphora Is actually a figurative device that describes repeating the same sentences beginning over several sentences. Usually done to connect the ideas or draw the readers attention to a certain point. Anaphora works best when the prose doesnt already have a habit of repetitive sentences starters. Simplify your Syntax! Consider the following sentences Thing grew tense as the sun began to set, and there was no hint of losing their hunters. Worse still, distant howling and barking could be heard, giving the group an idea what might be hounding them. Click to expand... Wow, those are a mouthful! What am I even trying to say with all that mess? If I cant figure it out, what makes me think a reader is going to bother to? Lets simplify these sentences. The sun set, yet tensions grew. Predators stalked from the growing shadows, unseen howls drawing closer. They werent alone. Click to expand... How to simplify a sentence? Strong verbs Sun began to set becomes The sun set. Precise nouns An idea what might be hunting them becomes Predators. Straightforward construction There was no hint of losing their hunters becomes They werent alone. Basically, get to the point. Dont write circles around your point, just get straight to it. Overly long sentences dont make your writing sound sophisticated, they just confuse the reader and obscure your meaning. Hey BMR! I am running low on topics that I can pretend to be knowledgeable about. So, is there anything you want to see me discuss? Feel free to post suggestions here, or pm them to me. Last edited Sep 25, 2018
Thread: Writing Tips (Comments and Questions Welcome!)

These are excellent things to include in writing. I'd love to see you tackle point of view in writing as well as flow of writing.
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

I know how to start one, but as far as replying.... there's no conversation box or reply button to press. What's the trick?
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

There should be one below the message like any other thread unless the conversation partner has left or it's ended. sent you a conversation message for testing.
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

Nope just a report in the bottom left hand corner of the signature.
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

Fixed. Whoever promoted you removed you from the registered group
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

Lol thanks!
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

Vekseid said Fixed. Whoever promoted you removed you from the registered group Click to expand... O
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

Hi! When I go to look at threads, it says You have insufficient privileges to reply here and I can't reply. How do I do that?
Thread: Question How do I reply to a conversation?

Hello! Youre a new member so you need to have three posts and be a BMR Member for 24 hours, then you will gain access.
Thread: Mx Male Pechadur's Shoppe

dusting it off after updating it bump
Thread: Mx Male Pechadur's Shoppe

ho hum
Thread: Mx Male Pechadur's Shoppe

bump before work Last edited Jul 19, 2019
Thread: Mx Male Pechadur's Shoppe

hm Last edited Jul 21, 2019
Thread: Mx Male Pechadur's Shoppe

bops --wait wrong thread lol
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Thread: Anyone interested in playing as a defeated powerful female character ?

bump, I'll add more idea when I have time.
Thread: Anyone interested in playing as a defeated powerful female character ?

Bump automerge1537854832automerge bump Last edited Sep 25, 2018
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

Is ignoring someone the same as blocking them? Will someone who is on your ignore list still be able to see and respond to your posts? If not, then I think a block list would be a good feature to have.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

Yes it is. if you ignore some one then go back to their page, you can't see their content. I don't know if they can see your content though. I think everyone can see content, but when it comes to messaging or interacting you cannot in regards to the person you're ignoring, but if you ignore them you cannot see their activity. That's how it was too on the block list on the old site.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

Ironic said Yes it is. if you ignore some one then go back to their page, you can't see their content. Click to expand... I'm assuming that they won't be able to see your content? I don't like one way mirrors.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

I updated my post, sorry! Try doing it with a friend for a minute. I'd offer but since I am a Mod I can still see your stuff and PM you, etc. So I won't work out.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

Or if you have another connected account do it with that one. Won't hurt to test it out. I am curious for the result.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

I don't have any other accounts to test this on, but I feel that if you ignore someone, then they shouldn't be able to see your content either. That leaves the door open for drama and trolling which should be avoided here.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

I'll have to talk to my Admin about that. I'll get back to you when I get a reply.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

He said what I said was right and that he doesnt think any forum even does that.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

There's also the issue that all they need to do to get around it is make another account and meet the criteria. It would add a great deal of overhead to thread views for relatively little gain.
Thread: Question Question About Ignore Lists

I don't feel the one-way mirror thing as you say, is really leaving the doorway open to dramatrolling. If you hit ignore on them you can't see any of their stuff and they can't contact you through messages so if they DID want to try and start drama or troll you, it would have to be done publicly either somewhere onsite or in one of the two chats we have in which case one of two things will happen 1 Staff comes on the attempted trolldrama starting and deals with it. 2 Another member comes across the attempted drama startingtrolling and reports it in which case staff steps in and deals with it. Could they say things behind your back in the conversations area to other people or in a private DM on discord? Yes, but that would still be a thing even if they couldn't see your content. I feel the saying It takes two, to tango fits well with your worries about it leaving that door open its really difficult to stir the drama pot with someone or troll them if they have you on ignore and can't even see it let alone respond. Thats just my opinion on it based on everything I've kind of seen or dealt with.
Thread: A Ticket For One Please (Ava & Vall)

Stood up again. The emerald eyed beauty stood outside of the theater in a red form fitting tank top with a baby Groot peeking out of the chest pocket and a black pleated skirt that stopped just above the knees. Long luxuriously smooth black locks cascaded down her back and over her shoulders and came to rest at her waist. The girl was stacked, but she just got dumped by two hundred pounds six foot three feet of trash for not being a slut and was traded for the genuine thing. Her best friend made plans to hit the movies and watch Deadpool 2 with her, but due to last minute plans Isabella Lucille Manner was stuck seeing the hilarious movie by herself. With a sigh the sun kissed skinned high schooled walked her red high topped converse clad feet to the theater, handed her ticket over and walked over to theater 13. The highest seats in the center were where she enjoyed sitting the most. She rest her feet against the back of the seat in front of her and more and more people filled the theater. Now she regret not having eaten and had no money for popcorn. With a sigh, she pulled out her phone and played a little game while waiting for the movie to begin. She attended Lyman High. She was a bright and good looking girl with a chest to behold and an ass to match. One of the only reasons why guys spend time oggling her was because she had matured earlier than the other girls. She was proportionate with an hourglass shape and a love of many geeky things, like watching anime, cosplaying, video games, and japanese culture. She was a gorgeous geek in disguise. So some would say, but she was sweet, friendly, and despite her rather pompous friends, she was the black sheep of the bunch.
Thread: Two teachers and a student (Thessa_The_Domme x Sheena-Tiger)

See more Okay everyone time has passed put your pencils down and your exam at the corner of the table Theresa said at the end of the hour and started gathering the exams separating the answer sheets from the exam sheets. Wearing one of her designer dresses with matching heels Theresa did not fit into the stereotype of a teacher and especially not a math teacher. Having been born in a wealthy family she had followed education mostly because it was obligatory since her parents found it more important to teach her how to run their holdings and how to trade on the stock exchange. As they passed away during a plane crash Theresa remained orphaned at the age of eighteen and had not a big interest in running her family business, or at least not full time. With some help she had setup a monitoring board who took care of the day to day business while she got monthly updates and handled her family's stock portfolio herself. Having now all the time of the world she decided to pursue a educational degree in math since she had always been good at helping others and liked it. So nowadays she was teaching math at a local high-school about an hour away from her family estate appreciating being around other people and having a nice colleague with whom she shared an office. Always having had more of an interest in women than men her love life as a futa had been a bit easier as she most of the time found women who for a while were pretty happy with her extras. Though ultimately she had never found the one probably due to her dominant nature and her desire to have someone under her permanent control. Hey Tasha you are early Theresa said as she entered the office and walked to her desk with a large package. Had a math test integration and differentiation so next time they have to calculate something in your class they should know how to do it. Theresa said as she opened the package and picked out a book with a bound woman on the front. Sitting down Theresa quietly started browsing the book.