Thread: Time To Buy The Farm? (Help Topic)

I'll try to give you some feedback. Since you asked for why one might not want to play with you this might sound a bit negative, but believe me, your threads are not at all bad. Especially your writing is great. I fear it might be better than mine. On second thought I should not give you advice. You will just steal the players. When you write a request thread you must think about the reader. The person reading it probably read loads of request threads, and wants to quickly find out if you are compatible or not so they know if they should take the time to read it carefully. To do that right now is quite hard with your request thread. Now, when I read it for a reason I like it a lot and if I was compatible you would definately be the kind of person I would like to play with. But if I found it at random I would just get annoyed and move on without considering it. I would probably lose out on lots of fun because of it, but working through a lot of text just to get the preliminary results isn't worth it. So, some suggestions First things first The first pharagraph should have some basic info - outine of kinks, genders your looking for, possible settings - so that you early on know if it is worth reading. Move down the about me and the rules, people can read that later if they are interested. Formatting For long texts, I find formatting to be quite important. I would make the headings bigger so you can easily scan through them, and perhaps make subsection like post frequenzy, post location etc bold. Also, use bullet lists for lists like your the limits. Length It is quite long, and that might be off putting. I think a bit of lenght can be good to attract the right kind of partner and show of your writing skills, but there is a limit. Take the part under I have an idea scenario random plot! as an example. It is charming and witty, but the only information it contains could be written in half a sentence. Some passages like that is fine, but I don't want to be searching for bits of information in an ocean of words all of the time. Kinks and wants Be clear with what you want. Now it mostly shows up in the plot suggestions, but I would like it much more explicit. A heading with kinks, that tells me what you like, should do the trick. Right now, the only way for me to find out if you want to be dom or sub, if you like romance or not, if you would be interested in fantasy, is to try to deduce it from the plots. There shouldn't only be one way to find out what your kinks are. I don't want to waste time playing with someone just to find out that our kinks doesn't work together when it could have been solved by communicating beforehand. Be specific. Post count You have few posts since you play by PM. That is fine, but usualy when I can't sneak peak at past roleplays I want writing samples as you already pointed out to know what I am deling with. Put them in spoiler tags and they wont eat space. Title Try giving the title more information about what you want. Sometimes I don't bother clicking posts if they don't at least give me some clue about what is inside. THIS searching THAT is boring, but it is informative. I am probably overexagerating a bit here to make my points. To sum it up The good news are that you are a fantastic writer. You know how to use words. The bad news is that you are using to much of that skill at the wrong place which hide the information. The really good news is that if you make the basic information more accesible I think all your problems will be solved. Think of it this way - if the problem was the other way around - your request thread was perfectly organized, but you just sucked at writing - you would be screwed. PS. Now that I write this I realize I'm hadly following my own advice in my request thread. Oops. PPS. I fucking love that the legal terms show up in the kink list for the plots. That is pure gold. PPPS. I actually have no idea if my rambling here makes any sense. Don't take it to seriously.