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Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Lycana gave him a low snarl back and gave him an angry look. Your still a jack ass. she snarled before her head turned and she saw two wolves making their way towards them. Lycana lifted her head and a huge smile came to her muzzle before she saw who the little wolf was, it was her little sister Ara, she was glad she was alive. I still hate your guts and always will. Lycana snarled at Blade before she broke off into a run, she ignored the agony in her hind leg as she ran towards her sister. Ara saw Lycana running towards her and she broke into a run towards her older sister, she was so happy to see Lycana. Ara's tail was wagging happily as her older sister hugged her tightly. Thank the gods you are alright, my life would not be worth living if you were dead. Lycana whispered into her sister's ear. I am here now dear, I hung on just for you. she said and looked up into Lycana's eyes to see that her sister was now crying. Ara hugged her sister back, she knew Lycana was now about to leave her alone again or take her eyes off of Ara.
Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Blake just smiled and shook his head, watching the smaller female run to the two approaching shape and holding back the few doctors that tried to chase after her. But she might bleed out! Cried out on of them, trying to push past their powerful leader. They failed miserably but he just shook his head. She'll be fine. She's just going to meet her sister. Hearth may have dropped the ball on Lycana, but I guess he came back with something almost as good. At least this will make her feel more at home. He said, lowering his arm and walking toward the pair of females. Hearth stood not far behind them, looking around a littler nervously and scratching his furry head. He feared that Blake would be angry with him, and the last thing he wanted was to have a finger bitten off or an ear torn to teach him a lesson. When he looked to his leader, however, he saw that there wasn't a ounce of anger on his face. Blake stepped up behind Lycana and chuckled, his icy blue eyes looking down on both her and her sister. Come now, why would she be dead? We would never kill such a cute thing. He said, grinning wolfishly at Ara. He glanced at Hearth and gave him a look, at which the lycan nodded and stepped up to Ara. Please, come with me. We need to get you something to eat and a living space set up until we leave. Said Hearth as he laid an arm around Ara and began to pull her towards the camp. Then, it just left Blake and Lycana. He smiled at her and motioned for her to follow him to his tent. Once inside he told everyone but him and Lycana to leave, though two large lycans stayed just outside the entrance. Blake sat down at a small desk that looked even smaller when compared to him. He leaned back in his chair, studying Lycana for a moment. Would you finally like to know why you're here? He asked.
Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Lycana was so happy to see her littler sister, she couldn't believe that Ara was there close to her. She growled slightly though as Heath took her sister away from her, she flattened her ears against her head. Hey where are you taking her? Lycana snarled. Ara shook her head and told her sister that is was alright, so Lycana nodded her head and watched her sister walk off with Hearth. Sorry, she can be a bit to protective, she loves me a lot though. Ara said as she looked up at Hearth and followed him off towards some place for her to stay. Lycana followed after Blake an angry look on her face, she hated him for some reason. She couldn't quite put her paw on it but she had a feeling he was up to something. Yah, why the hell did you attack my family and kidnap me away from my people? Other than you being some stuck up asshole. she snarled and barred her fangs. She then slumped down on the bed and slowly shrunk back to her human form pulling her clothing close to her skin, she was feeling rather cold that night.
Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Hearth led little Ara to his own tent at the edge of the encampment, sitting her on his bed while he gather a few things. It was a nippy night, so he quick to getting a few blankets for her. Not even a moment later he had a small table and a nice meal set out for her. Here, this is for any rough treatment that may have occurred before I got there. Hearth told Ara, stepping back and slowly returning to his human form. After a few moments later a weirdly thin man stood before Ara, his hair a deep brown and his eyes a deep green. Blake smiled at Lycana from the other side of the desk, leaning over it and placing his hands together. I'm not sure how mystical your clan was or how much your grandfather believes in it, but I know I'm a stickler for the stuff. I both trust and distrust it, I guess you could say. Back at my home land we have a few, oh, I guess you could call them Oracles. He said, standing up around stepping around the desk so that he stood mere inches from Lycana. And guess what they told me two months ago. The said I'd finally find the one I've been looking for, my mate, here. Can you guess who that might be? He asked, knowing he was being a bit of a smart ass. He couldn't really help it, since it was the only way he could hide his excitement.
Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Ara blinked and watched as Hearth moved around the tent, she cocked her head from left to right watching him move. She changed back to her human form and sat on his bed. She stopped shivering once the extra blankets had been added to her shoulders. Thank you for everything, your a nice male. Ara said and smiled at him. She hardly smiled for anyone, he was one of the few lucky ones who actually got so see her real smile. The only other person she would smile for was Lycana. When Lycana heard words she frowned at him and backed up. Its a load of crap, there is no such thing. You should be able to chose the one who is your mate through love not through lies. she muttered and shook her head. Its fucked up, I mean like I would really believe anything like that. We live now and in the moment. Lycana muttered and moved a bit more away from the big male, he was making her feel uncomfortable. Lycana still didn't trust Blake, she wanted to slap his face as hard as she could.
Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Hearth smiled warmly back at Ara, grabbing a chair and setting it on the other side of the table. He laid his hands in his lap while he watched the small girl. And you're a nice female. My name's Hearth by the way. I know this all looks really bad but please, trust me, everything is alright. He said, wanting to try and make her comfortable with her new surroundings. Why did you look to beaten up when I arrived? Did one of my clan go to far? He asked. He watched her eat, retrieving a glass of water for her to drink. He sat back down in his chair, still eager to find out who'd put the bruises on her and wanting to punish those who'd done it. Blake frowned at Lycana's reaction, actually feeling a bit stung by it. He stepped closer, his smile not as confident as before. I know how you feel, but when they told me about you I knew it was meant to be. I'd seen you before at the mass clan meetings, saw how beautiful you were and how strong you were. He said, coming even closer and lightly gripping her arm. We do live in there here and now, and this seems so right to me. He said, pulling Lycana closer to him and closing his arms around her. Can you really say I'm not even worth a glance?
Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Ara's eyes watched him and she listened to Hearth speaking and she smiled at him slightly. No it was not one of your men. It was my clan who has done this to me. I am the runt of my father's pups. He and the others always beat me up along with a few of the females. They hate me while they love Lycana but I never have had the heart to tell her. She would blame herself and may do something bad to herself. Ara said softly and took a sip of water before she put her fork down and sighed. Lycana yelped slightly when she felt Blake's arms wrap around her and she felt her face being pulled up against his chest. She breathed hard smelling his scent enter her nostrils. I hardly know you, you attacked my clan and kidnapped me away from my home. You mock me and my family when you talk rudely about my Grandfather. I hate your guts. she snarled and pushed herself away from his chest and glared deeply into his eyes. You could see she was angry.
Thread: Stolen Nightmares((Me and TheCrowsGirl))

Hearth frowned and scratched his head. Why would they do that? You're technically a princess just like your sister. He said, beginning to be a little glad that a good number of her clan had been killed, including her father. He found a little pleasure in being the cause of his death. He suddenly reached forward and, after a moment of hesitation, petted her head lightly. Don't worry, nothing like that will happen here. I'll make sure you're safe from here on out. He said, smiling as he gave her head one last pat before sitting back in his seat. Is there anything you need or want? He asked. Blake frowned at how Lycana was starting to reject him. He guessed he could see why she wasn't exactly to happy with him at the moment but hate seemed like such a strong word to him. Ok ok, I'm sorry for what I said. It was in the heat of the moment, you have to understand. He said, giving her a small pleading look, something that looked rather strange on such a big and dominant looking man. He reached forward and laid a hand on Lycana's shoulder, slowly letting it slid down her arm. At least give me a chance to change your outlook about me. He asked.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

Less is more, and avoid a passive voice whenever possible. Also avoid repeating the same verbadjective etc blindblindly, rolling. Here's a quick redux of the first couple sentences Olivers olive skin brushed against the luxurious silk as he rolled blindly in bed. In his sightless sprawl he brushed against something, the azure slits of his eyes opening to investigate. Every word counts when you're writing, and that's what often separates good prose from bad. Another thing is punctuation. You've got some issues with commas, as most writers do. You should really do a bit of research on commas, specifically, to get a better idea of where exactly they go in a sentence. You are neither over- nor under-using them, but you've got them in the wrong places a lot of the time. Example of almost right comma use is the first sentence after sample post, which I have edited as follows Noting a shadow near the doorway, Oliver looked up from his half finished breakfast to behold the presence of a beautiful woman with auburn hair. Please note that the sentence could use additional editing, and that the above was only changed in regard to the comma use. My version of the sentence would be something like Looking up from his half-finished breakfast, Oliver beheld the shapely silhouette of a woman outlined in his doorway. All things considered, I would give your writing about a 510, and I want you to try to understand that that is a big compliment. It's obvious that you put time and effort into your writing, and you've got the beginnings of a personal writing style cropping up in the way you frame your scenes and structure your sentences. It's clear that you roll the dialog around in your head a bit before you put it down on the page, because it sounds closer to natural than what you'd usually see in beginner's fiction. It's still a bit clunky, but as the saying goes, Writing is re-writing. What I think would help you tremendously is if you gave yourself a little mental slap every time you consider putting the words had, was, is, began to, proceeded to, would, be, being and anything else like them on the page. They're not inherently bad, but you over-use that sort of passive language. Instead of saying that Oliver began to eat his breakfast, just say that Oliver ate his breakfast. Oliver didn't start to do whatever, he just did it. Instant improvement. Anyways, hopefully this helps you out with your writing. Keep up the good work!
Thread: Rate my Writing?

Thanks I'll try to avoid passive language and you've only seen the tip of the iceberg when it comes to dialog. Heres a new post. Oliver smirked from ear to ear at Izabella's blushing it was always an ego boost, when he could make an younger woman blush. When the woman questioned his capability it was a slap to the face and saying how she could find another company was typical, but her questioning his leadership was the last straw. My men followed all across the world, but I cant be everywhere at once. Keeping track and paying out my men is difficult enough, but I also have to take into consideration the camp followers., Olver said as calmly as could manage. The man waited until the woman turned her back on him before clenching his fist with a grimace look on his face. By the time Izabella looked over at him the Oliver's fist was unclenched and his face vacuous, but his blood was still boiling. One day I'm going to humble you., he thought bitterly almost saying it out loud. Standing up Oliver went over to the table examining the bag of gold finding its weight suitable, but he knew he could milk more out of the girl. However, before putting the bag back down Oliver took a gold coin out and bit it to make sure it was real. Striding over to the woman he gently places his hand over hers, stopping the handle from turning. I don't need stories to bed wenches, just coin. You won me over girly you have our swords, so lets celebrate the occasion with you paying for a feast., Oliver gave Isabella an wolfish grin.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

One thing you need to do is read up on how to use punctuation when you're writing dialog. You're consistent, but incorrect, which is easy to fix.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

Punctuation aside how would you rate that particular post?
Thread: Rate my Writing?

It was alright, it just needed some more attention. It's great for where you're at, in terms of how your talent is developed right now, but like I was saying before it needs a certain degree of polish and for you to finish finding your voice, which are both things that come naturally over time. The trick is to keep writing, with the specific goal of getting better. Don't look for praise on your work, but instead find someone who will be kind enough to eviscerate your work for you and leave it's entrails in a steaming pile on the ground before stabbing it in the face with a soldering iron. That kind of tough love is how you get better at writing.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

Sadist much? XD Yeah I can see what you mean I just need to find my own style.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

I have to agree with Squishypink, in terms of your general writing ability. It's generally pretty close to being a style you can be proud of. However, there are a few glaring faults which, IMO, tend to drag it back. 1 Punctuation As Squishypink implies, nothing marks you out as an amateur more than not understanding punctuation. Generally speaking, when using quotes, use the comma after the thing that's being said, before using the verb that tells the reader something is being spoken, unless you plan to start a new sentence. It's hard to explain, but try taking what I've done below as a model. Squishypink read the post. It's really very good, she admitted, replacing her gutting knife. I won't be able to rip out the entrails of this one. She frowned. Shame, she sighed. I wanted to. In general, my tip to fix this is to read professionally written books, and copy the way paid writers use punctuation. 2 Also Try not switching between past tense and present, as you did in your first example. The phrase Not for long though as Oilver strong-arms both of the girls out of his bed should not have been in present tense, since the rest of the piece was in past. In general, try to stick to one tense unless you have a good reason for doing otherwise. In RP, btw, past tense usually works best and many request threads refuse to RP with you if you use present tense. Also, it's better NOT to mis-spell the name of your main character! 3 The passive voice means switching the subject and object of a sentence inappropriately. Example, saying The apple was eaten by Oliver. is passive voice. Oliver ate the apple. is much better in most cases. 4 Also, a couple of styling faults glared out at me. One big error many people make is describing something factual when it's a subjective opinion. ie A beautiful auburn haired woman. Much better to describe her, and let the reader describe for themselves if she is beautiful. Try something like this A woman stood there. She had translucent, pale skin, lightly dusted with freckles over her small nose, her face was framed with dark auburn hair. Despite her slimness, her firm breasts were large and jutted proudly. Her eyes were a deep green, and twinkled with mischief. Oliver gave a gasp, and felt his pace quicken. 5 Another styling fault I see is pointing out the needlessly obvious. For example Oliver had to hold back a grin from his lips. Did your reader really need to know that he habitually used his lips to grin? It isn't as if he could smile with his kneecaps, it it? Your sentence would have been stronger if youd cut out the last three words! 6 Avoid ambiguous sentences, especially if the wrong meaning is unintentionally funny. However, he wondered how much money was on the womans head Made me think of her balancing a pile of coins on her head. Much better might have been So this woman had a price on her head. Oliver wondered how much that price was, given she was willing to hire a company of mercenaries. In general, I give your style a 5 or 6 on a 10 scale, and despite what I said above, I think it shows a lot of promise. Hope this helps. Sy
Thread: Rate my Writing?

Thank you I'll try to incorporate what you said for today's posting.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

Heres two examples of my posts incorporating my fixed dialog. 1. A five foot nine figure clad in all steel with a unpolished and black appearance, could be seen prowling the lowland. With every step the man felt as if his bones would shatter even with all the padding underneath, he felt gelid. The man lifts his helmet off to better examine the carnage at his feet, him soon feeling a lone piece of snow hitting the top of Oliver's shaven umber hair. For every broken and bloody body on the man's side, there were ten of the enemy there with them. Before I came to this god forsaken country I had ten thousand men, but today I only have nine thousand and two hundred, said with a growl, putting his helmet back on. Though Oliver and his men bloodied Isabella's uncle's men before, this was the first major battle of the campaign. Speaking of the would be queen he seen the woman become more stingy, every time she were to pay him for his service. It couldn't be due to the fact that the girl's so called ally lords have yet to send anything other then a letter, after the Landless Bastards haven been fighting for over several months, Oliver was almost in tears with laughter, having known things would be amiss. Almost conveniently today was the day of the month were he would receive payment, maybe he would charge more for his causalities. Mounting his steed Oliver rode on back to camp where Isabella would be waiting, in his pavilion tent. 2. Cormac followed behind Ara into the garden, positioning himself in front of the seated girl. He didn't have to wait long to find out why the girl stopped, for pulled out a flute. Cormac watched as Ara wrapped her lips around the flute and started to play. The girl thinks herself a musician eh, the words ran through his head, the man held back a smirk. Though Cormac admitted that the girl could play having known, she practiced a lot. Smile at me again and I'll give you something else to wrap your lips around, you little bitch, he thought bitterly, the man hated her smile. Like a good dog Cormac waited until Ara stopped playing, before she commanded him to come along. Begrudgingly he followed along to the pottery room and noted once inside, it was empty except them. While Ara spinned a bowl Cormac stood vigilant and glanced at her occasionally. Though they were he didn't risk doing anything because at any moment a servant or a artisan could walk in.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

Your dialog punctuation is better now, but you still really need to work on your general use of commas and periods in your sentences. Like Alan and myself have both said, you are very close to having it right, but you're still inconsistent and off target. As far as dialog itself goes, I would rate these posts below your others in terms of sounding natural. I think that, in the course of thinking about the mechanics of grammar and punctuation, you let your dialog get a bit choppy and unnatural. That's fine, though, it's part of the learning process. My best advice to you would be to go on Craigs List or Meetup or whatever and find yourself a writers' group in your local area. Writers tend to gather at places with all day breakfast and murder each other's work over all-you-can-eat pancakes. Happens all the time and generally won't cost you anything. You'll get a lot of concrete advice and you can submit larger pieces of work to the group for a really good massacre. Come for the murder, stay for the pancakes.
Thread: Rate my Writing?

I could always hire someone to whip me for every punctuation error I make, but I'd probably end up dead. Thanks again for the help and taking the time to read my work.
Thread: Multiple Recipients

Now, I have been here for quiet some time. During that time, I never had this problem. Nor have I found an option where I can allow this. The problem appears when I am either sending or replying to a pm. Right after I have sent it, there is a blank column in my tracking folder. It has the same title as the one I have sent. However, the only difference isthat there is no recipient for that extra pm. Now when I go to my sent folder to check who I actually sent the message to. The pm I sent has multiple recipients instead of it being only the person who the message was actually for. I am not adding anyone in the BCC section when sending the message. Even when I click on the sent to column on the message in my sent folder. The it says I have sent it to the person while the BCC section states NA. This problem does not occur only on my conputer but on my phone as well. I tried to log out and back in. However, that does not fix the issue nor does deleting my cookies. If you anyone needs a screenshot of this problem to assist me or get it fix. I would be willing to take one for you. By the way, this just started happening a few hours ago.
Thread: Multiple Recipients

I think you would need a screen shot. It sounds like a very odd issue. Actually...I have the same problem, so I'm guessing it's becoming or is site-wide and there is a PM malfunction.
Thread: Multiple Recipients

Yeah I just had the same thing happen to me. When I clicked on the NA there was a profile there so I am wondering what is going on.
Thread: Multiple Recipients

...fucking CUTE.
Thread: Multiple Recipients

As stomach turning as seeing that they managed to get two thousand pms sent to them was, that could have been so much worse - if they'd exported, or if this was not found sooner. Thank you for bringing this to our attention.
Thread: Multiple Recipients

Would like inform you guysand anyone who is reading this. As of checking today, the problem have been solved. I don't know what the cause was or if it was you guys who fixed it. Anyways, currently I am not having the issue anymore. I will also post on here again if anything comes up regarding the issue.
Thread: Multiple Recipients

It's been fixed, yes.
Thread: AIM & YIM **NEW** roleplay ideas inside! (Smut? Porn? Cheating? Rough/Dominance?)

RE AIM YIM roleplay ideas inside! Smut? Porn? Cheating? RoughDominance? I. LOVE. your avatar. Hoooooly crap. We should make something happen. YIM littlescarletstarlet
Thread: AIM & YIM **NEW** roleplay ideas inside! (Smut? Porn? Cheating? Rough/Dominance?)

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