Review: Needs a lot of work....
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 16, 2013
It could use  more development.  For example, is this a world where everyone knows about the paranormal? If so, why is the main character so extraordinarily clueless?  She would have heard something and not just believed it's a fairy tale. However, it couldn't be a secret because the main character's best friend knows all about the paranormal and a random librarian went so far as to hire multiple witches.  So, an explanation about that would have been very helpful.The characters were interesting, but, not fully developed either.  People are introduced briefly and then they are gone or we have to embrace the lack of back ground.  There's no explanation for why they act the way they do or say things that seem odd, rude or mean.  The main character seems like she would be working at a McDonald's after graduating college  because she has absolutely no ambition other than to be with her mother.  Yet, there are brief moments that come out of left field,  where she acts or says something that would indicate otherwise.  There's no background for the bad guys either. They just appear with a couple of sentences for explanation and then we are expected to just move on and go with it.The plot itself is, well, not quite all there. I mean it's basically girl meets guy, guy is mean, neither can stop thinking about each other, guy leaves girl after sex, girl is in trouble, guy rescues girl, they live happily ever after.  No explanation for the bad guy, no explanation for the relatives, no idea where the bad guys go afterward or what happens to anyone after the girl gets rescued other than the horny couple. (Did the bad guys get away? Where was her father this whole time?  Is the girl still in trouble? And where the hell did she learn to fight like that with no training?)Overall, it leaves too many open questions.  Add that to some much needed editing and you get one star. It gets a second star because it was light and airy and if you didn't want to put much thought into the story, it's perfect for you.