Review: Terrible writing, immature characters
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 10 6, 2013
While the story has promise it was a difficult read.  The author needs to work on the craft of writing. Many rookie grammar, spelling and storytelling mistakes were distracting.  While in some cases the characters were hundreds of years old they didn't seem to have evolved beyond the consciousness of high schoolers.  Characterizations were also a bit inconsistent.  Political intrigue is not very sophisticated and the ways characters stow away and otherwise sneak around to avoid detection stretches credulity.  I also didn't appreciate descriptions such as "The Latina woman", "the Asian", or "the dark man" to describe every character who wasn't White.  In the meantime, what I assume are white characters had not such descriptions.  I appreciate the attempt but the author needs training.