Review: Writing Experiment That Fails, For Me
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 28, 2014
First, let me say I am a big Roz Lee fan (go, Mustangs baseball!) and love her erotic writing. Nobody choreographs a sex scene like she does, and this book is no exception; the pacing, creativity, and inventiveness is excellent. I especially loved the idea of a midlife couple as the stars of the novella.So, why the low rating? Well, like the premise of the story, that their Friday night sex sessions will be held without talking, the author has made the interesting choice to forego dialogue. There's a handful of short sentences, but not enough to give the reader a break. Although we dip inside Mr. Middlethorpe's head, and Mrs. Middlethorpe's head, we aren't SHOWN internal thoughts, only TOLD them: Mrs. Middlethorpe felt X, Mr. Middlethorpe thought Y.We don't even get to know what their first names are.For me, this writing experiment did not work; I felt held at a frustrating distance, instead of being IN the story. It was somewhat interesting the read for the first ten pages or so, then it dragged, despite the hot action being described.So for this reason, paradoxically, I would recommend that if you write erotica or erotic romance, you should read this novella. Even though I didn't like it. 1)YMMV - YOU might like it very much. 2) It's a great illustration, IMO, of how too much telling and not enough showing can kill an otherwise great story.