Review: Start over
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 11 12, 2013
I tried to read this, I really, really tried.  Every time I came back to it, I got madder and madder.  The story was a good idea.  However, I couldn't take the poor grammar, run-on sentences, style and syntax mistakes, etc.  If the writer couldn't get a professional editor, a retired English teacher would have been sufficient.  The best thing the writer can do with this is to start completely over.  Ugh!