Review: <scratching head>
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 6, 2014
I'm shocked and puzzled that this book has so many five star ratings.  At this point I've only read two chapters, but the quality of writing has so irritated me, I'm not sure I'll be able to finish.  There is always a risk when purchasing an independently published  book, but this one had so many five stars, I took a chance.  These reviewers must be quite young, or S. E. Smith has a lot of family members.Sentence structure is appalling.  One sentence can go from past to present to future tense in less than twelve words.  The author doesn't have a clue what show vs tell means.  Plotting is horrible.  First chapter is from heroine's POV, second is from hero's.  Nothing wrong with that except some paragraphs are lifted verbatim.  Repetitious isn't even a strong enough word.The story idea really interested me.  I was looking forward to reading this.  A writer who knew what she was doing could have really taken this and ran with it.  A shame that didn't happen.I'm going back to read more.  Hopefully, it'll picked up.  Unfortunately, I'm not optimistic.Ok, I'm into chapter six now.  Sadly, the quality of writing hasn't improved much, but story is fairly interesting.  However, the following sentence threw me for a loop:'It was a long time since he'd relieved himself with a living female, and Jesse's scent was driving him nuts.'<eyebrows climb up forehead>  Please tell me that doesn't mean what I think it does.  <Back to read more>.  Alright, there's something about they 'seek relief in a relief room'. See what I mean about repetitious, but anyway I have a mental image of a sperm donation clinic which in itself is a bit gross, but world's away from what I first thought.  Maybe it's just me with a dirty mind, but that's just another example of bad writing when an author doesn't make herself clear.  This is beginning to sound like poorly written fanfiction.  If it is, it's giving fanfiction a bad name.I'm deeply sorry, but I give up. When an alien male says he has to take a shower to quench his desire, that's enough for me.  Where did he grow up?  Milwaukee?  Obviously, no sense of alien culture here.  Total waste of $3.99.  That'll teach me to get a sample from now on, and I'll always read the one star and two star reviews first before buying.S.E. Smith, my constructive advice is to please take some creative writing and grammar courses, and get an editor who can sharpen up your work for you.  You have good ideas, but writing is a skill that needs to be developed.  Best wishes for your future work.