Review: Both the writing and the dialogue was awkward and juvenile
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 15, 2013
The writing and dialogue was awkward and very juvenile.  It was almost as though the writer had been given this story as a high school writing assignment.  It really felt like reading a 9th graders idea of what a sexy story should be.  I had the feeling that the writer had a big thesaurus out on her desk to look up some of the weirdest descriptive words I have ever read.  "Oral Channel" for mouth?  Huh?  I kept getting yanked out of the story by some of these strange words and stiff and unrealistic dialogue, as well as situations.  At least it was free.