Review: Could be amazing...with some tweaks
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 24, 2014
I usually only write reviews when I adore a book, so this is relatively new territory for me.  You can read the synopsis to know what this book is about, so I don't need to recap anything.  This was a premise that I had never heard of, and I was so excited to read it.  MC's AND military?  Sign me up!  But...(yes, this was inevitable), there were some issues here that kept pulling me from the story.  I think an editor could have really polished this story up.  I'm big on punctuation and grammar, and there were so many missing commas and awkwardly phrased lines of dialogue that interrupted the flow of the story for me.  I would encourage her to read the dialogue out loud to see if it sounds natural, because a lot of this didn't.  This is the kind of writer that I wish I could be a critique partner for, because my biggest thing would be SHOW me, don't tell me.  Show me how much she wants him.  Show me that she's flirting.  Show me that she's upset at how things went down with Dawson...don't tell me.  PS-  I am interested to read Dawson's story.  I really enjoyed the "Mickeyism's", I thought it was a clever idea and it really added to the story.  But, the chapter from his POV kinda drove me crazy.  I understand he's irish.  But, they say "bollocks" not "ballix".  That's the kind of stuff that made this a 3 star read to me.  I know why we needed an alternate POV, but I wish it had been from Corbin's, not Mickey.  It would have given us a chance to get in the hero's head and still showed the necessary story going on in her absence.  The cover of this book is gorgeous, and as I said before, the premise was unique and that's not easy to do in the world of romance.  And because there was so much promise to this book, I felt like any little bit I could do to help, I should.  Maura is the kind of heroine I love.  She has strength and a backbone and can hold a drink and even though it might not have been the smartest thing, I adore that she pulled a gun out at a military banquet.  Awesomeness.This book could have so easily been a five star for me, I just hope that I can give the next book that many!