Review: Good ideas, but needed editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 08 16, 2013
This could have been a good story. The original ideas were there. The storyline was compelling-what you could follow anyway. the Characterization was passable- although you lost track of the main ones. More about that in a second. A lot things that make a good story were all there. So what was missing.Editing and proofreading, mainly. This story of what happens after a disaster kills off most of humanity, and affects the very fabric of the reality of those left, lacks any continuity, and reads like a series of unconnected vignettes.It is so badly written that your mind wanders as you read it. It is almost impossible to follow the action and keep track of the main characters.If you're in to post-apocalyptic I would go ahead a DL (it was free when I did, otherwise wait). I expect you'll end up as confused as i was.It gets three stars for originality.