Review: Interesting premise, with flaws
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 11, 2011
The story starts out a bit awkwardly, the relationships between characters is not clear and the quest to stop stolen artifacts really has nothing to do with the story. Is Peter collecting real artifacts to save them? Or is he only making copies? How does that fit into the rest of the story? Once it gets to the castle on the island and preparations for the battle, the story picks up and the action is pretty good.Another disconnect, taking the little boy to the island also doesn't make sense, none of the action during the battle involves him at all. If he had been kidnapped, held hostage or otherwise involved, that would have been an improvement. As it is, he presence is irrelevant.The ending also needs work to tie up loose ends. We never find out what happened to the sailboat captain, did he survive? What about the bank executive? He plays his little part and then there's no resolution.My rating is for the story but the formatting of the Kindle edition is terrible. There are many words missing and 3/4ths of the book is in italics. Just a mess.Some stronger editing and much stronger proofreading would have made this a much better book.