Review: REALLY NEEDS HELP - MAYBE A CREATIVE WRITING COURSE ALONG WITH A GOOD EDITOR?
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 15, 2014
If you get turned on just by words describing a sex act – then this book could actually be for you.  While it did have some sex acts described – they weren’t really that erotic – more just the mechanics of the act.  There was nothing to bring the reader into the story – to care about the characters – to feel the heat because:The dialog was juvenile and stilted.  Writing dialog in without first thinking about how it would actually sound coming out of someone’s mouth just results in characters and actions so unrealistic that a reader cringes or really wants to throw the reading device at the wall.The writing style was choppy and lacked a smooth transition from one event/action to the next.Not very imaginative with a female protagonist that has too many TSTL moments.  Use some creativity to get your protagonist in the scene that you are setting up – do not dumb your character down so that you can set up a contrived scene.  It’s not just getting your character from point A to point B – it’s HOW the character gets from one point to the other in a REALISTIC manner.The book came off as a rough outline of an idea without the knowledge or experience to bring the characters or actions to life for the reader.This was definitely and quickly “return to Amazon” moment.  If the author wants to keep trying – she need to invest in some creative writing classes, and maybe read some really good books in this field such as the PETS series by Darla Phelps.