Review: A decent read,  but would have been better as a full length novel.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 29, 2013
The background and world-building needed more development.  Because of that, I couldn't get a real good feel for the elemental  race.  The main characters were nicely fleshed out, but the minor characters and the evil Demon needed a little more work.I think that a longer length would have enabled the author to elaborate on the elemental species and their powers, and it also would have allowed a better buildup for the final fight scene.  Things were resolved a little too quickly for me.  One minute the Heroine is struggling to learn her powers, and the next minute she's beating up the most powerful Demon on earth.  There seemed to be more emphasis placed on pillow fights than on magical abilities.Definitely a YA read.  The language was restrained, and the romance was young and sweet.  The editing errors weren't overwhelming; apparently the revision solved a lot of the prior issues that reviewers had mentioned.  I could suggest that a few of the "Gaaaaaaaahs" and  "Baaaaaaaaahs"  be eliminated.  Can't we just say that she screamed?  Overall, though, I think it was fairly well written.  The dialogue was mostly believable and the plot was smooth, if a little slow at times.  The writer does have a flair for flowery descriptions, which at times can be lovely when they're not overdone.3-1/4 Stars.  Clean up the bugs, elaborate on the world building, and lengthen it into a full length novel.  Then it could develop its potential, and jumpstart into a decent series.