Review: Decent story marred by awkward writing and inconsistancies
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 23, 2013
Let me make this clear from the start: I enjoyed reading this book, for the most part. I enjoyed the story, the characters, and the setting well enough. It's a fun little action space noir type of thing.However, it could really use an editor and/or another draft. The author's writing style is clearly still developing, and this ends up leaving us with awkward sentences here and there, which pushed me out of the story as my brain insisted on rewording them into smoother sentences. The writing just doesn't flow all the time. For a good amount of the book it does, but then it stumbles here and there, so you can't really just go with the flow.There were also inconsistencies here and there which were distracting. I'd be reading a long, read some part and then read another part which seems not to jive with what was just said in that previous part. It would push me out of the book making me think, "hang on a minute", but then not wanting to have to flip back in the kindle try to find the part it didn't add up with. Only thing to do is try to ignore them and push on. It's with this that an editor and primary reader would probably offer a lot.The final weakness is that there are quite a few cliche moments with cliche dialog. Cliche can be done right if it is done so well that you don't even realize it's cliche. But in this, they rather stood out.Those things are what knock this down to 3 stars. Otherwise, it was an enjoyable read, and with some editing and rewriting, I'm sure it would be quite a fine book. I hope this author continues writing this series, because despite the negative points, I do want to see where things go from here and what becomes of the characters in the aftermath of this story. :)