Review: so confused.
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 12 23, 2013
First, there are typos and grammar issues all over the place. I'm not usually one to complain but it got to be a. Little much even for me.Second, if you're going to write a story set in the US then please use the correct lingo. The very British sounding "uni" and university and calling the girls majors "literature course" or "marketing course" was very confusing. I had to keep reminding myself this was set in Cali and Montana where people go to college and take classes and major in lit or marketing.Lastly, the characters were pretty one dimensional. It might have been due to the sheer number of characters involved in the story (many seemed to only be present to create the opportunity for more lack luster stories). Also, the relationship between the two main characters was completely unrealistic. He's 7 yrs older than her and runs multiple businesses. She's a shy 20 yr old college girl without a clue. There is nothing in the story that shows how or why they would be anything more than curious about each other. Then he goes and swears to protect her after speaking barely more than 5 words to her... Umm yeah why on earth would he do that? Not a believable story line.