Review: Good story, horrible formatting and grammar, 2.5 stars
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 1, 2013
I picked up this paranormal romance quite some time ago when it was free. If formatting and grammar don't bother you, then you'll enjoy it. If it's a pet peeve, you might not be able to get beyond the first chapter.Femilla, the goddess of Womankind, has a duty to right grievious wrongs committed against women. As such, there are men in her keeping who are punished in the afterlife by the demon Demeana because they brutalized women when alive. Not all are beyond redemption, but must prove their rehabilitation. Andrew Regent is one of these men. After his death in 1509, he was tortured in the afterlife. But every one hundred years he has a chance. He returns to mortal life for a month. If he can find a woman to love who loves him in return, he will be saved. If he doesn't, he must withstand another hundred years of torture before he can try again. Many do not make it, give up and are consumed by the demon. It is now 2009 and Caitlin is his chance at salvation. As they get to know one another, Caitlin starts dreaming of the life of another woman, Catherine, the woman whose death caused Andrew to be condemned in the afterlife.This is a typical time travel/time slip romance which is fairly predictable. The characterization is excellent. The story, while a bit trite at times, is well constructed and dialogue is good. It is well plotted and consistent. But the formatting errors are crazy-making, so much so that I almost didn't finish the book. There are some grammar errors which also really distract, such as the Hero having "chaffed" ankles, and the Heroine feeling better after her morning "adulations". Oh, and Andrew is a "genus" with old weapons. I wonder what his species is?And this may seem minor, but glaring errors in covers really bug me. For instance, in the story Andrew is supposed to be blonde and the cover model obviously isn't. Yes, he's yummy, but it just doesn't fit. Additionally, you never put on bracers before putting on your shirt, unless you plan on fighting without one which frankly only happens in Conan movies and Frank Frazetta artwork.Before writing this, I checked the current publication date to see if maybe I just had an out of date download. But apparently that isn't the case and shows a lack of care and/or professionalism as several other reviewers have mentioned the grammar and formatting issues in the past. It's quite a shame, because this book could be a 3.5 or even 4 star work with just a bit more effort.