Review: felt like a rough draft
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 20, 2014
It was ok. Felt everything was crammed in, almost as if it was a rough draft if ideas that never got fleshed out. Lily got on my nerves more than once, always proclaiming she's grown woman but generally acts like a bratty 15 yr old, constantly needed reassurance and whining most of the time. Every time Damon opens up and answers her, she keeps picking and picking until it's a festering blister. With all he has on his mind and the changes and trickles of facts he's given, he has a lot to take in and deal with. Yes, he's a bit of a jerk, the whole 'I don't want to hurt you so I'm going to hurt you' circular logic got old quick too. All the potential is there, but there are just so many things tossed in at random and Poko and Grandpa being cryptic and mysterious when apparently MANY lives are at stake was just another irritant. It was a grand idea of a story though and if it was plotted out more concisely I think it has the makings of a really good book or three to see what else happens in Fort Branch and the surrounding areas.