Review: Too much tell, not enough show
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 25, 2013
There's an old writing adage, don't tell the reader, show them. New Discoveries spends too much time telling the reader how the characters feel rather than showing the emotions.The romance at the centre of this story has a lot if potential and I think the biggest downfall here is a lack of editing. It's definitely a case of style over substance. A straight mans gay awakening is rich territory for a writer to explore. The coming to terms with your sexuality is an emotional roller coaster that could be milked for a major emotional pay off for the reader. Unfortunately there is very little emotional connection between the reader and the characters in this story.In the climax to the story a 1 night stand with a dominate & thoughtless pick up should in theory leave the character of Matt with more baggage than an international flight, however all is forgotten within seconds of him arriving home & falling into the arms of the man he loves.I wish this story had been better. I had considered buying the complete collection but chose instead to download the first part as it was free. I'm hesitant now to read the others. If the writer doesn't have the time to invest in generating a higher level of professionalism I really not know if I have the time to invest in reading the other books. To be fair I will download the free sample for book 2, but if the spelling & grammar mistakes are as bad as they were in this book the free sample will be as far as I go.