Review: Too Many Distractions..Too Many People....
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 11, 2012
For me, for a short story to work it should be tightly written and produce one strong emotion.  I was expecting to have a nice tingly sensation.  I didn't.The writing itself is well done and the story line is O.K.. However, the story reads more like an excerpt than a stand alone short.  One of the main issues I had was there were just too many people in the story (and not in in a menage way).It has been a bad year for Christie, she lost her job and a boyfriend.  One because she didn't say yes and the other because he couldn't say no.  One day she goes into where she volunteers and hears the man she has a crush on, Michael, and another male co worker laughing.  Later in the story they are joined by an older female coworker, Alice.  These people are just a distraction in what should be two people connecting. These other characters would have been great, if this had been a full novel or even a novella.  The space  describing these other people would have been better spent in more foreplay between the H/h.As one of the other readers mentioned the bathroom scene was a complete turn off.  I don't know if it is because the author is male, but I think he should know, any female that goes into a public bathroom will automatically lock the bathroom door if it is a single  and if she had to unbutton anything she would have gone into a stall if it was a multiple.  Neither is conducive for the activity that Christie planned.  The whole scene felt icky, especially when he put his hand over her mouth.  This is supposed to be two people who are beginning to feel something real for each other not a disco rut.The entire scene afterwards with Alice made the bathroom scene seem even more tawdry.I think the author missed an important opportunity. Christie and Michael could have put the Christmas tree up together.  It would have given ample time for foreplay and anticipation.  As it was the writing concentrated on insert tab A into slot B and not enough on the emotions and passions.The author says this is his first erotic book.  If so, it is not a bad effort.  However, in my opinion if he wants to catch the female light erotica reader he needs to concentrate on how a motion feels and not just the physical act of moving.From what I have seen of the erotica targeting men this is too touchy feely and for women it is lacking emotion and the passion is a bit lackluster.I will have no problem reading something else by this author, but as is, this didn't do it for me.  I felt more icky than tingly.