Review: It's not great
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 28, 2012
I picked this up on a free day just to try it but I was not impressed. I really wanted to like the story but I kept finding myself skipping sections. Large portions of the text told back ground for characters that didn't matter. Almost every paragraph had a 'Show-Don't-Tell' issue. These kind of issues in a work this small are hard to overlook.There were good parts to it. The twist at the end did grab me but that wasn't enough to impress me. I would either cut this done to 1,000 words or build on it immensely. This could make a great novel or flash fiction piece but it reads more like an outline right now.See my full review online at Examiner.com