Review: Great story, but desperately in need of editing
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 10 3, 2013
"Time Flying" by Dan Garmen is one of the most believable time travel novels I've ever read.  The main character, Richard Girrard is impeccably drawn and totally, engagingly human to the point that he seems like a real person, as did the other significant characters.  I instantly liked him.For me, the book was a bit difficult to get into.  The first 1/3 of the book took me over a week to read because I kept losing interest and turned to other books and other authors during that week.  But I'm stubborn, and kept trying because there was a hint of something in the story that kept pulling me back in.  In the end, I was really glad I read the entire book.Although the story is quite intriguing, I became bogged down in all the military explanations.  That's just not my thing, but I'm sure many people enjoy it, so I'm not faulting Mr. Garmen's enthusiasm for things military.  However, there was a bit too much repetition in the mulling over of past events, which I found frustrating.  Also many sentences are garbled from missing or repeated words, there are some words that are misspelled and several big grammar mistakes.  These all greatly detracted from my enjoyment of the book.In spite of the problems with "Time Flying," I hope Mr. Garmen doesn't give up on the story because I'm greatly looking forward to reading the next volume of Richard Girrard's time travels.Thank you very much, Mr. Garmen, for sharing your wonderful imagination and story telling talent.  With the proper editing (and promotion, of course), "Time Flying" could be a best seller.  Good luck to you, sir.