Review: Almost there
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 01 26, 2014
At first I was planning to give this five stars.  Then several things annoyed me.  One was the stilted language in which the narrator presented.  It didn't sound natural, although most of the characters, especially the teen-aged girls, presented better.  The primary word (or phrase) had to do with leaving.  No one left a room, got out of a car, or went away from the scene.  Does everyone have to be exiting the car, exiting the room, exiting the whatever.  The book I'm reading now by another author is doing the same thing.  Attention, authors: variety is the spice of life.Another big spoiler was the scene between the two (former} lovers in the kitchen.  Since later it was announced that our leading lady had never had enjoyment with this man, why was this thrown In?  I had the impression that it was only included so that the generally pris sy author could interest another reader group.  Sex scenes can be appropriate to the plot and therefore acceptable, but please don't try to interest a different set of readers by throwing in sex that has no use in furthering the plot.This author can do better than this.