Review: Sweet story, but so many errors
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 24, 2012
I am reviewing this book because I really did enjoy the story, and hopefully the author has more good stories in her.I don't know if she will read this review, but it is meant to help, not to hurt feelings or anything.There are SO many errors.  Lots of punctuation errors, including mis-placed (or too many) commas (which change the context.) There are wording errors and several badly constructed sentences.Some examples:"......the fettucini alfredo looked delicious, unfortunately, she wasn't hungry anymore."This sentence says that it is unfortunate that the alfredo looked so delicious.  It needed to be broken down into two sentences.  The second sentence would start with "Unfortunately...""...protected him when me, or one of the neighborhood kids, wanted to beat the living daylights out of him...."  (should be I, not me) "...when I, or one of the neighborhood kids...."They're was used instead of their.  I really hate when a "writer" does not know the difference between plural and possessive."...Don't worry about the bonus room, ....there's no reason I can't pitch him and help get it done."  (pitch HIM?  should be pitch in.)These are just a few of the many similar errors.  A writer truly needs to proofread.  And if she herself does not understand the finer points of writing, she needs an editor.