Review: Decent, doesn't really stand out
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 08 12, 2011
More of a paranormal YA novel than a superhero story, "A Diamond In My Pocket" is decent, but didn't quite grab me.  The writing style is alright, but something was lacking.  If I had to pin it down, it would be whatever's the prose equivalent of meter- rhythm, maybe?  It's the effect of using comma's instead of semicolons, breaking sentences up versus keeping them together, and a thousand other stylistic elements that really define the writing style's sentence pacing.  Whatever it's called, the lack made the dialogue seem a bit stilted and unrealistic, the descriptions a tad boring.  Similarly, the characters didn't have quite enough development, the main plotline lacked the minor side-elements that make a truly great story, and the worldbuilding had a few annoying inconsistencies.  Nothing was bad enough to really slam the novel on; neither was anything good enough to promote it.  Still, it was free, and ok for a free novel.  Possibly enjoyable to teen readers, those with different preferred rhythmic structures to writing.