Review: story outline
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 12, 2013
This felt more like a story outline than a fully developed story. Very disconnected and sentence structure was not there. With some work though, I think it could be a great story. Was also very plain in language which was fine until she'd throw 5 or 6 big words in and then go back to simple language for the rest of the story, so it felt awkward. If she works at it, I think she can become a good author.