Review: Promising but.... (spoilers)
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 08 2, 2013
Grayson and Huntley. Two wounded people so closed down that they almost miss what's right in front of them. It's not a unique story to the world of NA romances, that's for sure, but the author did a pretty good job. I didn't exactly love the writing, but Grayson's character definitely affected me which means the writer is doing something right!This is one of those indie books that I feel like needed a little more time with editing/beta readers. Because while the author shows promise the book had some "glitches."(spoilers ahead)For instance~ I found some weird descriptions: in Grayson's POV, Huntley whispers "hi" and he comments how "musical" her voice is. Whispering doesn't have a tone, so I'm failing to see how it's musical. It's just breath... not notes.At one point during a frisky weekend together, Grayson finds Huntley making cupcakes. She puts the pan in the oven, they chat, make out with cake batter, he gets her off, she gets him off, they "take their time" cleaning each other in the shower, then they lay in bed and fall asleep together. The reader is thinking "man, those are going to be some charcoal cupcakes! Hope the apartment doesn't catch on fire." But don't worry, because after they get up and chat she "pulls the perfectly baked vanilla cupcakes from the oven." I'm impressed!! Either she baked those cupcakes at 90 degrees or Huntley & Grayson are the FASTEST people EVER to hook-up, shower, nap!And the actions of the characters left me feeling like I was watching the dramatic parts of a soap opera or 90210. It's cool to have one character that's immature or has a dramatic flair but when there's lots of growling, pouting, & crying going on with lots of characters it feels a tiny cheesy.And my biggest pet peeve is that Huntley didn't learn from the 1st time she had unprotected sex and got pregnant.... no, no. She did it again with Grayson. I can't stand that junk. She got pregnant twice from not wearing condoms? (the birth control was not mentioned until later making it a question you ask when reading). I don't want to read a book version of Teen Mom.And if I'm getting my facts mixed up and if she did get pregnant on the pill, then apparently she needs to start double bagging his junk.And a huge spoiler! In the epilogue it's 2 months after the baby has been born, they start going at it, and Grayson stops to propose. To which Huntley is completely suprised because they've "never spoken about getting married, even now that we have the baby." Surely you jest. Not one talk ever?This is the kind of stuff that was just too unbelievable for me.But like I said, the author shows promise. There are some sweet lines in here. Really sweet! I'd just like to wait until she's a few books in and has really grown in her talent before I buy more from her. But if you are new to NA indie authors, I'm guessing this is a good one to start with.