Review: Good idea, good starts, has potential to be MUCH better...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 31, 2013
The format of the book and it's spelling/grammar could use some work.  To the format, I agree with other reviewers, I believe many of us prefer shorter chapters so we can either read a chapter or two on a short break or devour several at a time. It gives a more natural feel of progression through the story as well.  The typos/errors in the writing definitely aren't the worst I've ever seen, but the review/editing process needs a little more time as there are still a few sore spots that stand out in the writing.  The flow and style of writing are also a little choppy and "amateaurish."  This felt a bit like an attempt from someone new to writing - you can tell the story is great in their head/imagination, but they're having some trouble translating it to the reader.  Some descriptions in the story aren't needed (obvious or redundant) while other scenes leave you feeling like you didn't quite "get" the full picture of what was going on.***SPOILERS AHEAD***The ideas presented in the story do make for a good read, but I believe they could have been developed quite a bit better. The relationships and charachter development as well as the resolutions to the climax in the book all left something to be desired for me.  Where is the history for Rebecca and Ashley that help you to connect with the main characters in the book?  Tell us more about how they interact with each other, because Ashley speaks very little and yet they seem so attached to each other?  How - just magic?  Then the big build-up to the end (which could use a little more suspense/mystery/details i.e. development) where the greatly-feared, evil Sorceress is risen and then is so easily killed by several gunshots?  Really!?  What a disappointment.  :(Overall it was an okay read, because I do love the ideas presented, but could see it having the potential to be so much more.  Especially with the ending, which felt almost like a slap in the face - Wait!  You mean that's it!?  It was like the author was so exhausted or excited about finishing that they rushed it and killed the whole story in a couple of paragraphs.I received a complimentary copy of the book in exchange for my review.