Review: Two stars for effort but please take the book down now
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 28, 2013
There's no question that ConSequence should be taken down immediately and given a severe editing. In its present condition, it really shouldn't be for sale as it's unfair on the book buyer to spend cash on an unfinished product. If anyone thinks that this is exaggerated, I counted well over 150 grammar and spelling errors ranging from the plain careless (ex-cetera) and 'wondering' instead of 'wandering' (that one appeared several times) to the hilarious "but he knew it was the police, they promised they would be indiscreet. They had kept their promise." and " ... moaned as his nose snapped and began to spill blood and puss over the wall."Some other prime examples:'Passed' and 'past' mixed up'four story building''common sense''attained a young girl in custody'' ... attention of ganglord Peter Sandeson whilst serving his sentence. Sanders ...''Her Majesties''Lollypop Lady'... and so on.I also counted over 50 cases of bad repetition.There were plot errors, too (SPOILERS COMING), with the worst being during the 'Howard goes to the morgue' sequence. Where do I begin?1. There's no way that the police (or the coroner) would allow anyone to touch the body, much less be alone with it, until after the post-mortem in case they contaminated the corpse.2. Sticking a plaster over a bullet hole? What about gunpowder residue showing how close the killer had been when the trigger was pulled.3. Going home to break the news to his wife? That's where the FLO (Family Liaison Officer) comes in. It's their job to see that the bereaved family have practical and emotional support during the critical post-death phase.4. Elizabeth being left alone while Howard is asked to go and identify the body? I don't think so.5. Howard being left alone after he'd identified his daughter? That was necessary in order for him to be able to go out later on his own but the story falls over at this point. It's just not plausible.Most of the errors are sloppy in nature and just the sort of thing that an editor would put right. The story's intriguing, I liked its unconventionality and refusal to follow the standard 'happy ending', bad guys get their comeuppance plot-path. That's why it gets the second star.Take the book down and edit it properly. I'm going to delete my copy right now.