Review: Annoying
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 30, 2013
This woman is unbelievable.  She's unable to filter her thoughts, which seem to amuse her eager "Doms" even as they use the revelations to "guide" her, via spanking or petting to become their woman.Too much, too soon.  The story line just doesn't hold together.  Even with artistic licence and reminding myself that this is a fantasy, this female just stripped herself literally and emotionally too soon to be credible.And, the little mistakes are another annoyance:"Tobi thought her heart was going to stop beating as she listened to Kent tell she and Kyle ...". Pronouns seem to confuse this author.  As does verb tense:  "I don't want spanked for lying... " "He listened carefully, ask her questions and thanked her .." Simple spelling mistakes trip this reader, e.g. ""...Micah didn't think you would probably every get the West sons ..."  A last editing is needed.This an easy read with enough freshness in the metaphors and the heroine's "thoughts" to amuse me.