Review: Total disaster of a story
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 10 31, 2011
I had so many issues with this kindle book that I almost don't know where to start.The very first thing I noticed was the formatting.  One of things I love about my kindle is the ability to choose the font type.  This book as formatted some odd way that you can only view it in blocky font that can't be changed.  You can change the size but you are stuck with this obnoxious font.  I almost quit reading at that point but decided it was my own stupid fault for not reading a sample so I kept going.I am quite frankly amazed I finished it.  This book could have done with some major overhauling by a halfway decent editor. I found multiple incidents of spelling errors (liberarian instead of librarian is a good example).  The descriptive detail in the book was repetitive and distracting.  Here is a good example "We have waited and watched, we thought they had left and then this.  Who ever it is, they had waited and watched" or "Quin returned to his office and went to his office"There is also the poor sentence construction through out the story.  It is a toss up if I noticed more run on sentences or fragments in this book.  Poor syntax and improper use of punctuation also constantly distracted me and ruined the reading experience.  At one point I was reminded of a high school English test I had where the teacher had deliberately made multiple errors in a story and the students were expected to find and correct all errors.As to the story line, it had potential but I just couldn't enjoy it.  The few times I was able to ignore everything I just mentioned, I found the writing stilted and boring.  Real people just don't talk like the ones in this book.  The writing  was very juvenile sounding and this could only be compared to a high school students class project.  If my teenager turned in this book for a writing class, I would expect it to come back with a C - at the very best along with a note suggesting the student resubmit it after spending more time on it.Because of all the problems I have just mentioned, this was only the second time in two years I have found myself requesting a refund for a book from amazon.  Considering the other time I asked for a refund was because I quit reading the second a pair of twin brothers started having sex with each other, that says a lot!  Even though I only paid $2 for this book, I felt ripped off and left with no choice but to ask for a refund.  Do yourself a favor and do not read this book unless you need a good example of how not to write a book.