Review: I tried, I really did
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 29, 2012
Aside from the grammatical and spelling errors already mentioned, the punctuation was atrocious and the plot was pedestrian as well as convoluted. I got to the point where I was actually praying for a "deus ex machina" to come out of the woodwork and end the torment. Or at the very least, a hurricane to blow them all away. The heroine is silly and brutally insipid. She has fantasies of her captors, won't escape when she's in danger but escapes when someone is helping. She walks off and leaves a major piece of evidence with the bad guy then forgets all about it, runs into an alley while being followed by the bad guys and generally fubars every chance she has of dealing with the situation like an intelligent human being. If this were a monster movie, you would be rooting for the monster. I got through 80% of this before I couldn't take it any more. I'm sorry. I tried--- I really did.It was a workable premise and I give it two stars for that. If this writer would have someone edit and bounce ideas with, she has a chance of doing good work in the future. But this book would need a major rewrite before it's unleashed again.