Review: Has potential
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 12, 2014
While the writing is mechanically proficient, the author is capable of turning a phrase, and it has an interesting premise, I found the storytelling to be a bit lacking. Seemed like one long info dump in which the main character doesn't really act but is instead acted upon--I can only think of two instances where he actually did something, milking a cow and hiding a coin. Well, okay, three, he also sets out on his journey but even that's made to feel like something acting upon him since the choice and all had been made before the story began.Lots of tell with slivers of show, this feels like a well-written first draft in which the general beats have been established but still needs to be fleshed out. The plot feels a bit weak but that might be addressed in later installments--not sure if seeming inconsistencies are intentional or not.