Review: Good idea but not well done.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 24, 2012
THE CLOSER YOU GET by L.A. Witt.STORY BRIEF:Kieran is 27, a promiscuous gay guy.  Alex is 21, grew up in a small town in Montana where he had to hide his sexuality from everyone including his parents.  He has never touched or kissed another guy.  He heard there was a large gay community in Seattle so he moved there for college.  He wants to lose his virginity.OPINION:I loved the underlying ideas and how they fell in love.  But the storytelling was not as entertaining as it could have been.  It's done in first person which did not work well.  The narrator's point of view wasn't special enough for a good story.  It would have been better adding Alex's point of view.Too much time was spent analyzing things and being educational.  I was tired of Kieran saying is this too much?  Is this too fast?  Alex would say maybe go a little slower.  Kieran would repeatedly tell Alex to say stop if it's too much.  Everything they did was talked about at length.  Alex was timid, shy, and cautious about doing anything physical.  A few times passionate kisses were hot, but other times I was uncomfortable.  Sex included rear door activity.Like most romances, after the couple gets together there is a separation crisis.  The reason for the separation was stupid.  It's over used in romance.  It did not fit.  I would rather have no separation than to have that one.  You don't have to have a separation to have a good story.  There are other conflicts and subjects one can write about for couples.DATA:Narrative mode: 3rd person.  Kindle count story length: 4,085 (407 KB).  Swearing language: strong, including religious words.  Sexual language: moderate to strong.  Number of sex scenes: about 12.  Setting: current day mostly Seattle, Washington, with a little California and British Columbia.  Copyright: 2011.  Genre: gay male contemporary romance.