Review: Atrocious grammar!
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 3, 2012
First, I always give credit where it is due, so I will say that Ms. Gemus has good ideas.  However, she fails miserably in her expression of them.  These novellas are packed with more errors than I would believe possible from any 8th grade graduate.She says "than" when she means "then", "worst" for every "worse", leaves out so many words that we find ourselves trying to read her mind to finish sentences when we should be reading her book.  I am not talking about the occasional errors most self-published authors include.  These things (along with every other possible type of error you can imagine) are on every page and in every paragraph.  I would be surprised if even 2 grammatically correct sentences could be found on each page; it really is that pathetic!  Even with writing this horrible, if the plot were any good I would give 3 stars.  It's not.  Usually novellas feel a little rushed because so much is packed into so little space.  This book and its predecessor, however, drag so badly you feel like they're 800 pages long.  For 95% of the book, the plot is paused at the following point: Moira is holding Ally and her friends prisoner while Ben is working and Gabe is trying to think of a way to rescue them.  There you go, you just read this book. Rather than enjoying the story, I felt as if I were completing a chore.  Please forgive my lack of paragraphs and other formatting; my old kindle removes such things when posting.