Review: Just OK
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 08 20, 2012
This story was simply too short for me to connect with and care about the people.  The explanations of what Twyla was getting into were too abrupt, and all the mental anguish got boring very quickly.There's a germ of a really good story here, but it needs a lot of filling out.  It also needs some grammar and punctuation repair.