Review: Needs a Rewrite
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 24, 2014
Not a very well written children's story.  The children are barely mentioned before the dragon action begins (we have no identification with the children).  Flying cats turn into dragons, eat chocolate, and get water thrown on them (how exciting). And a leprechaun just happens to be hanging out in the neighborhood.  Weak story.  The dragons are the strongest part of the story.  But there isn't really much of a story to this story.  Well-written children's stories usually do one of these things:  educate kids as with nonfiction books, help kids deal with real life dilemmas, or teach them morals or lessons.  This doesn't seem to do any of that. Weak.  And the delivering of valentines for a party as the "resolution" of the story, even weaker.  Some study of successful children's stories might be in order--public libraries are full of them.  Also illustrations would be helpful.  Some words in the story were too old for the intended audience as well.  A rewrite with the kids and dragons might be in order, but the flying cats and leprechaun just don't work.