Review: Rather Stale White Bread
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 28, 2013
This book seems like it might be an early effort and that the author has hit her stride since then. The story would make a good novella, but there isn't enough substance to carry a full-length book.The story line is entirely predictable until the last few pages which contain an oddity more than a surprise.New author errors abound--repetitions to fill pages and new developments with no preparation, as when the hero suggests the heroine accompany him for a walk and readers are told that he finally decided to go outdoors a week ago when we weren't watching.A word would be missing here and there, which wasn't too difficult to handle, and misused words were downright amusing: she was "ringing" her hands; he grabbed her "waste."There were many opportunities to add subplots or interest throughout the story, but they were not used. The hero's villainous mother, the neighbors and the doctor could have saved the book.This one isn't dreadful, but it could have been a much better book.