Review: Needs a good editor
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 13, 2013
The author definitely has some talent, but this book needs some editing. For example, the main character's age (Marsha) does not remain consistent, nor did the time when Marsha's dad died remain consistent. 1) "Here we (Marsha) were thirty years old." and "You're (Marsha) thirty-four years old." 2) "Dad died when I (Marsha) was twelve." and "Dad died five years ago (Marsha is 30 or 34)." Marsha's idiosyncrasies were overdone to the point of extreme, such as her constant consumption of M&M's--she should've been a blimp--and her constant klutzy moments of falling, slipping, tangling her hair, etc. It appeared as if every other page used one of these idiosyncrasies. The author's "who done it" concept could have been suspenseful; however, the reader is able to figure out the thief's identity within the first one-fourth of the book, which made Marsha stupid in her cluelessness and made the ending very anti-climatic. Plus, the climax was abrupt and unbelievable in it's attempt to build suspense, such as "a hand reached out of the women's restroom and yanked me inside" and then the quick get-away/kidnapping that lasted less than five minutes. Also, it appeared as if the author attempted to make the book "Christian" literature by having the characters go to church and by throwing in an out-of-context paragraph with Marsha contemplating God for a moment. I would recommend this book to someone that wants a quick, easy, no-thinking-necessary read. I'd like to read a new book by this author with the hope that she has obtained a good editor.