Review: Interesting story; the writing needs work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 8, 2013
After spending an hour reading this I didn't feel much at all. The story was good, definitely piped my interest, but the writing was barely pedestrian. There were many repeated phrases, and the characters were not developed. It's an interesting idea, and I hope with some practice the author dials in his writing; there's potential here.