Review: too much tell; not enough show
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 30, 2013
Author needs to trim all the telling and include more dialogue and action.  Telling goes on for multiple paragraphs.  Timeline is difficult to follow.  Even the birth of protagonist child isn't granted much space.  Descriptions and background go on endlessly not moving the story forward.  A huge number of sub-characters that don't move the story towards its conclusion.  Not a good read for me.