Review: Needs More Bite
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 09 13, 2011
For fans of the paranormal romance genre, this short story is not a new one.  A girl has some powers that she does not know about but others in the misty realm of the paranormal know about her and her powers.  A good guy wants to save her and a bad guy wants to destroy her.It's not horrible and has some potential, but needs serious polishing.  Things in the story are a little illogical (she's attacked in an alley but her brother and friends don't take her to the hospital?) and Emily, our college-bound heroine, might be a little TSTL at moments.  Many events in the story also lack enough description.  I've read books - good books mind you - where the character conjures their power for the first time and the description of it lasts almost a whole chapter.  While that isn't reasonable for a novelette, more than a few paragraphs are called for if this power is the driving force behind their search for her.This is probably a 2.5 for me.  I didn't dislike the novelette; it just didn't do much for me.  As a final note, I "purchased" this while it was free.  Had I paid for it, I wouldn't be happy with my purchase.