Review: Good story, but needs an editor
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 11 1, 2013
This is a light, enjoyable, funny story with great characters that's an easy read with a touch of drama and angst. The author clearly has a great sense of humor and loves all his characters and I found myself laughing more them expected in a m/m romance. The romance itself was sweet and the sex scenes were decent. The only story point I had a problem with was the event that landed one of the characters in the hospital because the perpetrator came out of nowhere. I would think a better approach would be to include these characters, show their escalation and then what happened would make sense. As it stands now, it's a good plot point to demonstrate love, but doesn't have any emotion attached to it because it came out of left field.So, onto my main reason for the 4 stars: grammar, punctuation, formatting and random highlights. This author doesn't seem to know how to insert a page break between chapters, then there's the use of the wrong pronoun like "he" instead of "his," then there's ending of sentences with words missing and then there are highlights in places for no reason. It was truly aggravating that such a good story was lessened by these avoidable and fixable things.Hence, while I enjoyed the story and the set-up for the next one, I'm not sure if I'll be buying it as I don't want to deal with the headache from the grammar, punctuation and formatting issues.