Review: Just Say No
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 15, 2014
PLOT: Sarah has a job interview with Erik. When the interview is postponed, she sneaks upstairs to his penthouse. He mistakes her for a woman sent to him by his uncle. The two of them share an instant attraction.PROS: Over all, the plot is not bad. The pace is decent.CONS: It was largely unbelievable. And I’m not talking about the shifter aspect. One of Erik’s employee’s suggests that she sneak up to his penthouse in order to get a job interview when he wants to postpone. That’s the sort of action that could get an employee fired. Why he wants to postpone is mysterious since he remains in the office for several hours after her scheduled 4 p.m. interview. Then, Sarah, a Yale educated virgin, decides to sleep with a man she’s just met after barely any conversation. They go away for the weekend together the next day and are in love before the weekend is over.The phrasing is often awkward. The writing would be aided by the use of more contractions.It was odd that Sarah’s part was written in first person, but Erik’s part was told in third person.The majority of the editorial errors I noticed dealt with consistency. (There were the occasional misused/misspelled words such as “stripped” instead of “striped” and “bulged” instead of “budged.”) It’s almost as though the author didn’t read her own book. The largest inconsistency deals with Erik’s house. At first Sarah goes up to his penthouse. After their weekend together, he takes her home to his house which has a backyard that butts up against a park. If this is a second home, the author doesn’t say so. Sarah follows him into the park, but ends up running away from him. She runs home, somehow escaping a park full of shifters. But this indicates that her home is in the vicinity of Erik’s. That seems unlikely since she needed the job to pay for her student loans and he’s a billionaire. When she wakes up, she wonders how he got in the house. He talks to her and she walks out without saying anything. And then she's home with her father. Have I lost you yet? The author certainly lost me. After a while, it just becomes a confused and jumbled mess.It was frustrating to read. At one point before Erik reveals his shifter nature, Sarah becomes concerned that he’s not the man she thought he was. She’d only known him for three days! It was enough to have me screaming at my Kindle.2 STARS: At about 50 percent, I was bored and I really lost interest in how it would finish. The character development is so-so and I didn’t really believe that they knew each other well enough to be in love. I did manage to finish and I am ever so grateful that I only borrowed this and didn’t pay for it.