Review: good attempt and start for author
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 9, 2012
What if?  It is easy to get caught up in characters of series novels or shows and wonder, "what if:"  they didn't get married (or if they did), they got killed or when cliffhanger (if they died), what would the next installment be (just like the many Potter fans must go through as they create story futures for their characters that have no new books to look forward to.  They can, in effect, write (or rewrite) the things the way they want to.  Often, as one is not going to have same mind as creator, the story really ends where the creator stops.  Not so in this case.  This writer did a nice fan fiction type homage to the creator by keeping the visuals of the original character on par with previous offereings.There were some formatting errors and a couple punctuation/grammar things - but nothing horrible.  The issue with this short was its length.  Since it is advertised as short, I would not normally take a star off review for such.  However, in this instance I did as the story was so short that the initial pace set became too rushed when it need not be.  So many details pushed in and set the nice amble pace (initially set) at a trot,  then a dash with a "this is what happened everafter - the end."  The whole tale could have still been short and the initial fleshing of scenes and imagery would have been better presented had a few more minutes and a few thousand more words used.  This author has a creative offering and if they can start a character and plot of own, they will likely find some success.I would read this author again - but something longer.Good luck! :)Christine