Review: Great Read with Only Minor Problems
Rating: 5 out of 5
Date: 11 13, 2013
If he'd just given him the money, would Jess, her husband, and the baby been spared the tragedy? He decided to do anything he could to help Jess and her unborn child, even marry her to protect her and strengthen her custody case. What he didn't expect is to come to care for her so much.There were a few mistakes or parts I questions in the book. There was occasionally two speakers in the same paragraph, which was confusing, and "on" was used for "one." There were also some mixed-up or awkward sentences:"...bittersweet memories kept pushing to the front of his mind. Of the brother he was once close to.... When had he changed from a usually sweet teen into the stranger he'd been for as long as Dan could remember?" (Really? It seems to me Dan has just remembering when his brother had been different.)Life had delivered Jess Bentley a wallop. Her husband of a few days was shot and killed by a drug addict in an attempted robbery the day they returned from their honeymoon. If that wasn't enough, her estranged father-in-law blames her and threatens to take custody of her baby, after she finds out she's expecting. When Dan Mulholland, the brother of the man who killed her husband, appears on her doorstep, she screams horrible things and slams the door in his face, but he is the one who comes to her rescue. She realizes he's not responsible and begins to see how kind and caring he is, but letting him help doesn't put an end to the problems.Dan Mulholland feels his own guilt over what happened. His brother had come to him the day of the murder and asked for money. Dan knew he wanted it for drugs, so her refused. If he'd just given him the money, would Jess, her husband, and the baby been spared the tragedy? He decided to do anything he could to help Jess and her unborn child, even marry her to protect her and strengthen her custody case. What he didn't expect is to come to care for her so much.There were a few mistakes or parts I questions in the book. There was occasionally two speakers in the same paragraph, which was confusing, and "on" was used for "one." There were also some mixed-up or awkward sentences:"...bittersweet memories kept pushing to the front of his mind. Of the brother he was once close to.... When had he changed from a usually sweet teen into the stranger he'd been for as long as Dan could remember?" (Really? It seems to me Dan has just remembering when his brother had been different.)"I'll write my down the number for my cell phone." (And, since they have cell phones, why didn't Jess call him when she ran late shopping?)"They also the ones who picked the dress out...""She was saw that Dan had lurched to his feet...""...the baby was still waking twice times a night."The story, however, was very good. A few problems should have been handled differently or not ended so abruptly or unreasonably, and the ending was just a little weak, but I could fill in the what-happened-next, and it did end well. The characters are loveable, and the story is clean, with no bad language or sex scenes. I thought the main plot was set up in a way to be believable, and I could understand how both Dan and Jess handled things, even if I didn't always agree. The worst part of the story for me was where Dan pulled a drunk. This seemed totally out of character for him, especially with the way he had struggled over his brothers addictions. Nevertheless, I really enjoyed the book and hope to read more in the series.