Review: Stilted, wordy, doesn't flow like it could
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 19, 2012
I am digging the story.  It's a neat concept, but I do not think the author is properly bringing it to life.  There is the usual smattering of misspelled words and grammatical errors found in all of these books.  It's not quite enough to completely distract me, but I will say that there have been a few passages that I have stumbled over and had to go back and re-read to make sense of it.  The dialogue...I'm not quite sure how to describe it.  It's very...wordy.  Lots of unnecessary words used, and at times it comes across as though the characters are too formal when speaking to each other.  Other times...have you ever read an instruction manual that's been translated from another language?  Words are missing. Some are in the wrong order.  Some just don't even belong.Overall I am enjoying it, but it is starting to get to the point where I am checking the progress bar to see just how much I have left.Good concept, poor delivery.