Review: Good story, terrible edit
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 18, 2013
The story itself is decent, if suffering from using 10 words anywhere 5 would suffice. Certain plot elements could be presented better, and a few stretch credulity, but overall not bad.Dear gods man, have a friend, read this, or hire an editor, something, PLEASE!- 'Coarse' is not the same as Course, 'after words' is not afterwards, 'finely' is not finally, 'Rooky' and 'Rookie' used in the same sentence and what the heck is with CO'2 for CO2. And these are all in the first pages of the epic.- Finial e's are often dropped, making Here into Her, Mode into Mod, etc...Maybe I just became numb or the later writing improved, but these errors became less intrusive later in the book. I did almost give up after the first paragraph, it was that bad.Decent storytelling talent and I hope to see more, IF, you do a better job of proofreading and editing.