Review: Could be better
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 11, 2012
I thought this story had a good plot and could have been great but it wasn't developed enough, it was written very simply as if it was for children but it includes a sex scene so it is obviously intended for adults. The characters weren't developed and I didn't connect with them, I know this was only a short story but I still think it is important that readers can relate to the characters. Parts of the story felt rushed and I would have liked some more depth overall, this could definitely be developed into a longer and perhaps full length story.However, the author is still young and she obviously has a great imagination and talent and I wish her all the best for her future writing career