Review: Boring plot, terrible editing
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 21, 2014
Even in a genre where grammar can be a frequent issue, this book is a hot mess.  It doesn't appear any sort of proofreading was done.  It is sometimes difficult to tell what is happening or when the action is taking place.  At one point, a character named Kyla is narrating a chapter and we're told that Kyla is wearing such-and-such and "I" am wearing this.  Who is the "I"?  It's truly some of the worst editing that I've come across and I am a regular reader of self-published books.The plot is a tedious series of repetitions of vacuous genre cliches.  Skylar, our main character, cycles between the three men in her life-- Casey (her first boyfriend), Dominic (the guy she hooks up with immediately after Casey), and Zo  (her longest relationship).  As soon as they sleep with her, all three are unable to let her go.  This affection is expressed through violence and a showering of material gifts -- the brand worshipping in this book is remarkable, even in a genre notable for a general brand fixation.  The book's focus on the material objects surrounding Skylar frequently crosses the line into the hilarious -- like when Zo carries Skylar into his bedroom for their first coupling and Skylar tells us that his bed has sheets with an 800 thread count (what, did she stop to look at the label?).Skylar is the ultimate victim.  Unable to leave a relationship unless she has another (richer) guy on deck, she puts up with the most appalling treatment from men.  This wouldn't necessarily be a fatal flaw, but she is always resolving to leave and then rapidly changing her mind.  This, such as it is, is the plot of the book.Skylar gets clothes/cars/houses, Skylar has great sex, Skylar gets beaten/abused, Skylar cries about it . . .repeat.  We're supposed to believe that she is highly motivated, but since virtually all the action takes place in the bedroom or the mall, who can tell?Jones certainly has a way with words (Zo, we're told at one point, is packing what looks like two kingsize Snickers end-to-end with a giant mushroom head on top), but the plot is a huge loser.  The decision, in part two, to expand the story to include all of Skylar's friends, is confusing.  Since they were only minor characters in part one, I don't know why we were suddenly supposed to care about all the details of their lives in part two.