Review: Could have been shorter
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 14, 2013
Oddly enough, the other piece I've read & reviewed by the author needed to be longer...this one needed to be shortened.  One of the problems is that unless he's writing alternate history, the ending as foreseeable as that of the Titanic.  Shortening it wouldn't have changed that, but it would have allowed for the story to provide more of a gut punch for the reader.