Review: Fun MC story
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 02 23, 2014
What I liked: The characters! The wild, colorful, over the top characters, from the lost Indian princess heroine to the big, bad boy MC hero. They were fun, engaging, sympathetic and I was happy to go along for the wild, wild ride with them. Prosper is an awesome club pres and father figure. Diego is a bad boy hero, but once he locks his passionate sights on Raine, he never looks at another woman. That I can respect in a hero, no matter what huge, dumb mistakes the boy makes. And he does, adding to the angst of this tale.What I didn't like: Paula, you can write. Looking forward to more stories from your talented pen. But I am begging you, get a professional editor, one who will teach you the correct homonyms to use. Also learn proper punctuation. When I get lost in a sentence and have to re-read, which happened a lot, it jerks me out of the story every time. Your core story is too good to miss. AND DON'T USE CAPS TO DENOTE PASSION, ANGER, AND WHAT HAVE YOU! Because it's just silly, and makes me want to giggle instead of being totally into the scene.Aside, Did I believe Prosper would have those powerful men in his pocket? Oh, heck no. But definitely write on, girl. You've got the chops.