Review: Here's to the Pookotz Sisters
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 22, 2013
I admire Bart's first effort on writing this mystery cozy. You can tell he put a lot of thought into this story.  But, I have a problem. As a former editor, it is hard not to wear the editor's cap when reading a book.  Bart's ending was very well done with a few surprises thrown in. It was the beginning that slowed me down. I, personally, do not like too much detail in the surroundings of the background. I like just enough to know where I am, but only like certain points brought out if they are to play in part of the plot later on. Sorry, Bart, but this is what I was taught by my favorite professor, Gary Provost.  He used to tell us, "Treat your words like employees, if they don't work, fire them." I hope you take this with the opinion of mine that I see great potential for you and further Pookotz mysteries. Describe the important characters better and put the background where it belongs.As I said, your storyline was very good. I can tell you put a lot of thought into the characters and the mystery.  Now, give your readers a chance to see the characters through your eyes.Best of luck to you and I look forward to your next installment in this series. Believe me when I say, I have had favorite chapters & lines & even characters removed with a slice of an editor's pen. But, it has taught me a lot. Prof Provost is long gone, RIP, but you may be able to still find some of his books. Another saying, "Make Every Word Count". I think about him every time I put pen to paper (errr - words on computer). I am now awaiting my own editor to see how I faired. He is pretty tough - so, I am holding my breath.Keep on writing!Patti