Review: Plot fine, writing needs improvement
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 17, 2013
This is a sweet storyline and the premise of the plot is good.  However the way it is written is awkward.  The story seems stilted and as a reader I didn't feel engaged.  Even when Parts of the plot should have stirred my emotions the writing didnt draw that out.  Overall it is a good storyline and could get to a better place with some work.