Review: Could have been better
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 08 23, 2013
Really, it started with a good premise. But we missed the story of what really happened leading up to the sex scenes, which is the most important part of the story.  And I am sorry, but it is NOT "her and X went...." It is " She and X went"!!!!!  This is a basic grammar mistake along with " withering" during a sex scene versus "writhing" - because I would hope she is writhing and not withering from what he is doing!!  It could have been a really good story, and I hope the author makes at least the grammatical corrections, to make it better.