Review: unmet potential
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 04 23, 2014
The story has a lot of potential which unfortunately is not realized. The dialogue is stilted. I imagine somewhere along the line this writer was told that contractions are not proper for dialogue, which may be true of an essay or term paper but certainly is a true of a novel of this nature.Loosen up the dialogue. Round out the characters and let some life into it and this could be a good novel.