Review: 2 stars for the story, zero for the writing
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 4, 2012
This started out as an interesting story, but about 1/3 of the way in, it fell apart with bad grammar, mispellings, and just really strange sentence construction and conventions.  I don't care if the author was writing in Russian or English, with a translator; there's no excuse for something this bad. All this is so disrupting to the reader's experience, and totally takes one out of the story.  I had an especially difficult time with:----Instead of saying 'he','him', 'his', or even a proper name, a character will refer to another as "the guy". (The guy left the room, the guy opened the door, etc.)  Is this a variance of "The Donald" (as in Ivana Trump)syndrome?----A key male character starts refering to his grandmother as "my old lady".  Really? Is this a Russian phrase? or a translation of a Russian phrase?Natasha: get rid of your "amazing" editor, and find someone who knows how to edit.