Review: Good storyline needs editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 13, 2013
I like the concept of this series and each story line is good but there are a couple easily fixed things that would make it so much better. The whole book reads very clinical and formal with "it is" instead of "it's" or will not instead of won't etc... I like to immerse myself in a story and feel as if I'm there but with such a proper way of speech for the characters I felt more like I was reading a book report instead of being there IN the story. The characters spoke to each other a lot like "forgive me for interrupting...may I please ask..." very formal instead of sounding how you would really speak or be spoken to. Also, except for the one character, Emma, none of the women seem all that distraught that they were essentially kidnapped and auctioned into what should first appear to them as sexual slaves, until they get to know their mates. Perhaps more real response and realizations from the main characters in the future to make the reader a bit more satisfied with the mates' outcomes. Also, the fact that they made this deal with a couple of NASA admins instead of finding out and contacting our actual government seemed kinda weird. Like, none of these women clarified this fact to the Therons and forced the council to further contact the real government? It's like the women basically didn't care they were abducted.It sounds as if I didn't like the story and actually I did. The concept is good, the characters of Theron are intriguing and the series has great potential. I will buy the next one in the series to see how the story progresses and if the editing is resolved. It will be interesting to see who the next book is about!