Review: Much Improved
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 07 26, 2013
I loved the story. Motorcycle good guy's club. FREEBIRDS .... Rescuing abused woman, getting them new homes and identities. I liked the name of their organization. I liked Sam and Cheyenne. I liked the supporting cast. True, Chey acted more like she was 15 instead of 25 but, she was kick-ass. When something happened she didn't like she got right in your face and told you about it. She didn't run after Sam, even though he expected her too. He had to do the chasing. I liked that!In my opinion it could have been a 4 or 5 star book for me but, and it's a BIG BUT, the editing was terrible. Well honestly, there wasn't any. Words were left out. Words were added and not needed. I and me continually misused. The same with they, there and their. Bad typing: Like instead of life. Whole instead of hole. My instead of me. But instead of cut. Hap instead of cap. Easy typing mistakes that could have been fixed with a reread.The typestyle was all over the place. At least three or four different fonts. This could have worked if the font was changed according to the pov. That could have actually helped identify the speaker. As it was, there could be three different fonts on one page for no rhyme or reason.At the first of the book, when Sam and Chey meet, she gets on the back of his chopper. Later she explains that there is no room for a passenger on Sam's motorcycle. At another point, Sam orders Chey a burger and a Chocolate Frosty at Wendy's. In the next couple of sentences she is finishing her burger and Dr. Pepper. Confusing inconsistences.Many times, especially towards the end of the book, it is almost like the author forgot part of the story so she decided "I'll just stick it in here". It now becomes a memory. This made a very choppy storyline. It was hard to keep the timeline straight.I am so disappointed, because I liked the idea, just not the execution. Sounds like there may be more books in the series. Will I read them? Sure, if they are free or the editing greatly improves.I reserve the right to upgrade the stars in this review if there is an edit for this book.  :)REVIEW EDIT: It appears this book has been edited. I skimmed. From what I saw, the type style was consistent throughout. I am not sure of the grammar but nothing jumped out at me. I am going to change my 2 star review to a 4 star. (Yes, poor quality workmanship does bother me that much.) I am now going to buy the next book in the series. I hope it is as good.