Review: maybe go back to game design and children's books...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 14, 2014
I really loved the basic story here, but it felt like the author had never even read a sci fi book before. You should not have made them humans. I liked the idea of amphibious beings, but your just confusing things. Especially when you have your characters doing things underwater that would be impossible in any universe. Seriously, how can you drink tea, and spread jam on bread underwater? Also, your technology for these people was seriously just weird. You have a race who doesn't even know what space is, or what it consists of, sending a manned ship out into it. How could they be that backward on the one hand and advanced on the other? It doesn't make any sense at all. It's like you forgot what you were writing about at times. You contradicted yourself throughout the book. Another thing about that that bothered me was the sudden presence of gravity on board the remora when they lost their water. You do realize they should have been weightless. Did you even research anything about space?I'd also like to point out that according to their speeds, they never came close to leaving their solar system. That is one of the most crowded solar systems I've ever heard about, what with all of the aliens and what not flying around.Your story line was flimsy, totally unbelievable, and had too many fortuitous events. Your characters were completely unbelievable as humans. You should have made them a different species. Humans are not that squeamish. You might want to study some literature on human nature if you do another book for grownups. All in all, it kept my interest just barely. Made me mad enough at the end that I'll never read this author again. Very lazy. It's like you decided to wake up one morning and write about something you've only ever heard described to you, badly. Do some research next time! Try a bit of a back-story on the race as a whole! Use your imagination, because your readers will, and this just won't do...