Review: tedious descriptions and weak heroine.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 27, 2013
I think the main meat of the story is good and the characters Interesting but this needs serious editing. Cut some of the detail upon detail of description...that bogs the reader down in your concept instead of allowing the story to flow naturally. Don't describe every aspect of the character allow their actions to define them more and last give it a better more fitting ending. The ending was like you ran out of steam and just ended the thing. The story was way to fractured at that point to end effectively.