Review: Good Story; Editing lacking
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 8, 2014
This was a good story, probably worthy of 4 stars.  It's set in 1968.  Scott is a private investigator.  Mercedes is an FBI agent.  She contacts him for two reasons: first, to help her father set up a computer system to organize his real estate business (remember, it's 1968 and computers are building-sized, and rare), and second to help a friend of the attorney general whose son has gone missing in Bermuda.  I somewhat question whether there were female field agents in the FBI in 1968, but I'm willing to accept it for the sake of a good story.  I also don't know if the FBI would be sending 3 field agents to Bermuda, a foreign country, to look for 3 missing Americans, but, again, I'll accept it for the sake of a good story.  I had figured out who the "bad guy" was very early on in the story, but was happy to read the story and see how the FBI and/or Scott's agency would work it out.  The chapters were fairly short, and there were sections within each chapter; that made the book feel fast paced and exciting.  There were two problems for me: first, the dialogue felt stilted: people used each other's names in conversation much more than I've ever heard in real life.  But the other reason that I took away a star is that the punctuation wasn't right; many commas were missing, causing me to have to think about a sentence more than it warranted.  A better editor would have noticed this.  It's a shame, because other than that, I liked the book.