Review: Could be great with some work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 4, 2013
I was given this book in exchange for an honest review.I hate having to give a bad review to any book because I know that to an author their book is like their child and to have it talked about in a negative way is very upsetting.  I hope that this review will be looked at in a helpful way and not as an attack because it is definitely not meant in any hurtful way.The premise of the book is actually pretty good.  I did like the idea of the their being a school for supernatural kids that is blended in with a traditional school in such a way as to allow it to remain hidden.  I also really liked that it was described like any other high school complete with that one group of girls that every past and future high school student will recognize.  Whatever they are called at different schools; plastics, barbies, etc., we all know who `those' girls are and no story of any high school would be complete without their inclusion.  The premise of this book is that a crazy supernatural person that wishes to take over the world and it is up to Angel and her friends to stop the threat.  Pretty good idea for a book.The problem that I have with the book all comes down to writing style and proofreading.  This book is set up as several blog entries that are written mostly by the main character interspersed with flashbacks.  There is nothing wrong with this format but I just felt that there was little thought put in to the writing of each post.  Several times throughout the book there were instances where it seemed the author had forgotten a necessary detail and instead of going back and writing it in to past pages where  it would be logical she would just tack it on as `oh, I forgot this detail but here it is now that you absolutely have to know it.'  These entries felt so out of place and threw off the whole flow of the story.  There were also several obvious grammatical errors that should have been caught in the proof reading.  The one that sticks out in my mind, mainly because it drove me crazy, was the use of `maybe' instead of `may be'.  These errors were so obvious and frustrating that it completely ruined the story for me.I also wish that there would have been more character development.  The basic story of the characters was told in the story but I never felt like I got to know the characters on a personal level.  There is a huge potential for amazing characters there and I would love to see them become more real.  Without better development of the characters I feel this book will just never be more than mediocre.The one thing that I did actually like about this book is the ending.  I never expected the book to end the way that it did.  I do not want to give anything away but in a part of the book where you expect an epic fight the story goes in a completely different direction.  Putting it like that makes it seem like it would be a big let down but it actually worked very well and left me stunned.I am hoping that the author will do some more work on this book and then try republishing.  With a little more work I feel this could actually be a really great read.