Review: Overwritten, poorly edited
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 4, 2013
For me this story had too many editing errors (wrong word, word omitted, wrong tense) and too much florid description, so that it interfered with the reading.  For example, Lee/Lisa had blonde hair with streaks described as of "platinum and flax" not just once, but twice in the exact same words within a few pages.  She didn't have elegant clothes so much as name brand everything (like a James Bond parody), although several of the brands actually did not evoke the sophisticated elegance she supposedly had.  She wore DKNY, not Chanel, even though she is supposedly a top of the line New Yorker with tons of money.The love story as she reconnects with her high school boyfriend felt unrealistic.  Her reasons for breaking up with him 17 years before are unclear (because her bigoted drunk of a mother didn't like him?)  Other reasons thrown in later didn't explain why she never contacted him).  Their reasons for getting together and the barriers that held that off both seemed unrealistic.  Worst of all is the idea that exposing a small child parents' custody disputes on TV in the guise of a Little League story would be possible, or could in any way be good for the child was plain offensive.  Here it was a ploy to get the dad custody, but nothing about it rang true.