Review: A whole lot of naughty . . . and in need of an editor!
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 1, 2013
Well, the concept was interesting, but the execution needed so much more work than was put into it.  First, I agree with other reviewers about the stilted conversations.  NOBODY today speaks without using contractions (I'm, you're, couldn't, hadn't, etc.)  Yet everything was written as if it was turn of the 19th century in terms of formal speech.  It ruined the flow of the dialog.  Also, this author needs to get his obsession with the exclamation point (!) under control!!!  It seemed like every other sentence ended with one.  He needs to understand that judicious use of the exclamation point is necessary for a purposeful emotional punch to his narrative.  otherwise, it loses its effectiveness.  Lastly, this book needed a serious read-through by an editor because there were so many instances of missing words, extra words, and flipped words that it just killed the flow.  I was so frustrated.As for the content, I think the D/s stuff was just over the top.  And the sock fetish?  Gross!  So ridiculous, I laughed when I knew it wasn't meant to be funny.I read one short story by this author that I liked, but his other work is questionable.  His subject matter is always the alpha top and the much smaller, somewhat helpless bottom.  He needs to change up his formula and practice his writing before he publishes another.