Review: a great premise lost to a lack of solid editing and story construct.  Not horrible, not great – just a passable read
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 4, 2014
I SO wanted to love this series of stories, there was wonderful potential promised in the title.  Sadly, by the time I got to the final installment of the series, the holes in plotting trajectory, character development and reasoning behind it all fell far short of my expectations.Lilli is enjoying her moment in the sun, but when her secret seems to endanger her in ways that never quite seemed to fit with the secret’s revelation – she has to decide if standing and fighting or running is the answer.Missing for me was Max as a hero, when Lilli is threatened, his attraction only goes so far and he isn’t interested in continuing to be her punching bag, or involve himself further.  There should have been, after the obsessional overthink from these two, some sort of loss or remorse in the end, and there wasn’t.  Too many people that are only half-built and introduced for convenience just kept me wondering where this was going.I’m glad it’s over: a great premise lost to a lack of solid editing and story construct.  Not horrible, not great – just a passable read that missed the wonderful potential hinted at from the title.I’ve read erotica that spans the gamut from truly horrible to absolutely fantastic. The only difference between the two is the author’s ability to develop a character and their sexuality in new and unique ways, while managing to not allow their own personal reactions, hang-ups, or predilections interfere in taking the scenes into new and different territory.  Part of that responsibility is the author – the other part lies with editing and demanding a push, a tweak or even a rewrite when the story lags, fails or seems lost.  All of that was missing here, and what results is a passable story for the uninitiated erotic reader who prefer endless drama and a touch of steam.Overall – this is a 2.5 – 3 star read for the series – OK but not great.I received an eBook copy from the publisher via NetGalley for purpose of honest review. I was not compensated for this review: all conclusions are my own responsibility.