Review: editing!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 09 3, 2013
I liked the basic story, but the “gazillion” typos and grammar errors made it necessary to stop and decipher what was going on and who was speaking.  Many paragraphs switched between points of view making it difficult to follow who was saying or thinking what and I felt the characters and their situations lacked development.I believe if this author would develop a timeline to follow for her story it would have read far better than it did.  The prologue of the main character’s mother speaking to her as a child doesn’t have a point were the story is concerned and could have been used to explain why she left her pack or how she came to be in her current situation. Additionally, she is wondering why things aren’t progressing as if significant time has passed when at the same time the author tells you she is coming up to her first weekend off—ergo she just met the guy five days ago.We are to believe this woman is a survivor of extreme abuse and neglect while at the same time we are to believe she is an alpha female capable of single handedly whipping an alpha male and her response to the out-of-line drunk was so out of proportion to the situation.  No one who experienced such poor treatment and who was supposedly smart would go around announcing to everyone that she has a fortune either.Finally, no explanation for pack alpha Alex’s attitude and behavior was given; however, after our main character makes a public display of rudeness back at him, he suddenly welcomes her with open arms and changed attitude?  When did our hero say he didn’t want to be pack alpha?  What happened to the former alpha's bad guys, did they also just suddenly change?  This story will leave you wondering and full of questions.