Review: Cute short story but...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 24, 2013
This was a cute erotic love story with a happy ending, but I had a hard time getting by all the grammar and tense errors. I kept track of at least 22 errors. tie should have been tied, jump should have been jumped, supposes should have been supposed, her should have been she, press instead of pressure etc. It drove me crazy and kind of broke up the rhythm of reading.I think this short story seriously needed a fresh pair of eyes.