Review: Not a bad story but editing is needed
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 23, 2013
There is a strong need for grammatical and creative editing in this work. The author uses identical descriptive devices over and over. He seems fixated on telling us how old each character is. I also found a lot of places where I felt as if the wrong adjective was used in a sentence.  I could work out what he meant to convey but the words he chose were not quite right.I am not one to slam an author, and I am aware that British speaking styles may account for some of what I am referring  to but I do think a thorough editing by an English language teacher would benefit this book.