Review: Good story, needs a little work but author shows promise...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 13, 2012
The story line definitely has potential.  It is clearly one of the author's first efforts and she shows great promise.  She either did her research about Native Canadians or she lives within their society.  Regardless, the perspective of the characters was well-drawn, especially the bar scene in Alma.  I'll be very interested to see what happens if she chooses to write about some of the other characters.There are a lot of complaints in the reviews about grammar, spelling and comma usage.  This is a story told in first person and, as I speculated above, I'd be willing to bet that the author is a very long-time resident of northwestern Canada/Alaska or native to those areas.  Taking into account the double letters, the usage of "ou", etc. there were only a couple of true misspellings.  Grammar?  No problem if you're familiar with the speech patterns and lexicon ("shouting" a meal, "shouting" the hotel room) of northwestern Canada/Alaska.  Punctuation?  Definitely could have used some editing help, but those mistakes are very easily overlooked.After the author gets some more writing experience under her belt, I'd be very interested to see what she does with a revision of this story.