Review: Needs another good going over
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 25, 2014
I believe I downloaded this when it was free. Good thing. I made it to the 62% mark and had enough.There is an interesting plot to this work. The main character, Black Jack, is a hired assassin. He doesn’t care who the target is as long as he gets paid. A chance meeting with a British bloke named, William Piper turns his know world upside down. Mr. Piper wants to enlist Jack into his world of vampire hunting. Unknown to Jack, he has a hidden history Mr. Piper is going to awaken. That’s a pretty good premise.Pros 1) The action scenes were exciting and well thought out.The cons.1) Formatting, grammar, sentence structure, repetitive words/sayings and spelling. It’s all over the place.2) Character development. Poor. The main characters Jack and his soon to be accomplice, Carmen Piper act more like love sick teenagers then trained killers. At the beginning I enjoyed Jack’s sarcasm and humor, but as the story progressed it became boring and obnoxious. No depth what so ever.This is a real shame as the story could be so captivating. I saw where some reviewers defended the work, as the author is an Indie and doesn’t have the funds for a professional editor which could cost in excess of a thousand dollars. Fine. Then seek out folks who will go through this for a minimal fee or free. Or even better yet, go back and re-read the work and clean it up. The only one your hurting is yourself.Mr. Norris, I will gladly give this work a second chance when I know a revised version is available.2.5 stars