Review: In need of a re-write
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 6, 2014
I genuinely hate to give such a low rating of any writer's work, but this story just isn't well written.  First of all, the tale could have been told quite well with half as many words.  Frequently the choices of words were poorly made.  The story itself is disjointed and unnecessarily unconnected.  There is a lack of focus during the telling with the author/narrator jumping from paragraphs of minutia to large passages of time, days, even weeks in the midst of a paragraph.  Then it just ends.  Overall, the concept might have been done well, but we are left with a disappointing result.  I hope Ms. Mazurkiewicz will consider a re-write and re-release.