Review: Great ideas--bad follow through
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 13, 2012
Undercover Submissive by Michelle Hughes is a great creative story--and an absolutely horrible follow through.  The devil is in the details and Michelle doesn't have the details right!I am an ex-English teacher and a secretary and I found the grammar, punctuation, incorrect words (sight/site--respectively/ respectfully) and spelling so bad I almost didn't finish the book.  She even got mixed up between Cait and Cayce, the twin sisters.  Had I been this bad in my work, I would have been fired!  She needs a proofreader and an editor.  I would give her an A for creative and a D for skills.  (And skills can be learned!)Her creative ideas are wonderful and I loved the story line!  But grammar, punctuation (too many apostrophes and they were all wrong and not nearly enough commas!), spelling and word usage errors are a writer's stock in trade.  Done incorrectly, they make the difference between a mediocre writer who will always need a day job and a great writer whose stories and skills will always be in demand.After sexual abuse like Cait and Cayce suffered, one usually becomes either a whore or a nun.  Here the twins chose these opposite reactions and their whole lives (and the entire book) hinge on this.  Cayce and Dylan are explosive together and I loved their chemistry!  I liked the ending, but it could have been strung out a little longer and better.I would like to see a companion novel about Cait's story and who she finds to love.