Review: Not the worst I have read, but needs work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 6, 2014
The fact that this is essentially a short story -- only 57 pages, for which the author is charging as much as most indie authors on Amazon charge for a full length novel -- should have tipped me off that this wasn't going to be the most satisfactory experience. However, it was the problems with grammar, sentence structure and the like that caused me to wince repeatedly as I read this brief little tale.The story itself reads like one of the vignettes from the "Kill Bill" movies. The world of gambling and gang violence in the Far East, combined with a sappy love story in which the woman is constantly protesting that her boyfriend should stop buying her gifts because he's given her too much already... seriously, does that ever happen?I'm tempted to lay out all the spoilers right here just to save others from having to subject themselves to this, but I suppose that would be tacky. Let's just say that there is very little here that you wouldn't already guess would happen in this story.It's got real possibilities but needs an editor's massaging fingers to make it a good story.