Review: Poorly Written - Returned It
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 31, 2013
Lord, O Lord, can you please make some new editors so that the M/M genre doesn't have to be so embarrassingly bad so often?Honestly, I returned this after only 20 pages. I like the written word. I love the written word. I read around 300 books a year.But definitely not THIS one.This writer has two tics that just plain drove me crazy.First, she apparently doesn't like the word "man" (or the book was a bad electronic translation from Japanese): "the male looked up at me". "the male was at the door". See the dog run, run spot run!! What was she thinking? Or is English not her first language and she couldn't find an editor? And what the heck is wrong with using "the man", you know, like every other writer in the English language?Second, the dialog reads like Robbie The Robot. "He will not come out to see you". "I will be there". "When the snow lets up, it will be better". Hasn't this author ever heard of contractions? People just do not talk the way she writes. I've NEVER heard anyone talk without contractions: "he won't come out", "I'll be there", "it'll be better". This cowboy even talks to his horses in long, un-contracted, formal grammatical sentences. What, does the horse have a PHD? There wasn't a single contraction in the first twenty pages of the book. Sheesh!The writing itself was so bad I just couldn't go on... it was torture, and I just hate seeing the language massacred.This is an amateur effort that a good editor could have made a lot better. The plot piqued my interest, but I just couldn't get past the written words.