Review: So not good
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 09 12, 2012
While the author showed some small sparks of talent in his/her writing in a sprinkling of places, for the most part there should be laws against books written this poorly:First off, to those who like things clean, this is not the book for you - this piece is erotica, not romance, and that wasn't immediately clear to me when I read the plot summary.I do not have a problem with erotica, but the story-line elements need to be well-written or the erotica elements need to be written with enough imagination or experience to give me some visceral or mental reaction. In a best case scenario, both the story is good and the erotica is good but that combination is harder to come by.  And unfortunately, this piece fails on both accounts.I also have a problem with people that try and write erotica who have no real world experience in the bedroom - at one point, there was an impossibility of positions and other points that had inappropriate order.  The whole thing was just so stilted and odd...and well, as if the author had pieced together how the whole sex-act worked by reading multiple B-class bodice rippers and giving it a go with pen and paper rather than with a partner.As far as the romantic parts go, there are none.  The author does a fine job of controlling the characters and the plot to the point that it is the author, not the characters (or any other story-elements) that are calling all the shots.  Thanks to the author's voice, I knew exactly what was going on every step of this story, even if it didn't make sense or resonate with the earlier parts of the story.  Bad bad bad!As I mentioned earlier, there were a few sprinklings of inspired writing throughout  (a few sentences long, each time and they made me think, "wow, this could have been great,") but there was enough bad mixed in that it overpowered the few glimpses of talent to be had here.  Not recommended - even if available for free.