Review: Needs a lot of work
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 23, 2014
This story is about Brigid, a young witch running a New Age shop passed down by her grandmother. First off, the story starts out as if readers are already familiar with everything going on in Brigid's life. She's outside on the ground, with her faithful cat Mari, trying to cast a spell to keep her grandmother from dying (against her granny's wishes of course). While she's out her phone starts ringing, and it's her grandmother calling her to tell her she's dying right that very second. REALLY? Do people do that?Then during the conversation, several words/terms are spoken by Brigid and her grandmother in what I suppose is their native Gaelic language, but none of the terms are translated or explained, even when more terms are used throughout the story. And it's never explained what the grandmother and mother died from.Then there's Christian, Brigid's best friend who's been pining for her for several years with no results. It's later hinted that he has an ulterior motive, but it's never revealed what that motive may be. Also, it seems as if Brigid is kind of leading him on anyway. And I am assuming that Christian is aware that she is a witch, being that he attends the mother's funeral where chanting and magic is performed and he doesn't bat an eye. But again, we don't know for sure. THEN there's the fact that Brigid has never had any idea that she was even attracted to women, but a single kiss from her cat-turned-naked chick and she realizes she's not only attracted but in love? Wow, that was SOME kiss. (<-- Sarcasm. The 2 times they kissed, and that's ALL they did, ranked about a 1.5 on the hotness scale)All in all, the only way for this to have been a good story was to have fleshed it out from beginning to end. There was too much lacking here. It reads like an entry in a high school creative writing contest where there could be no inappropriate language and the limit was 75 pages. Glad I got it for 99 cents, but wish it had been free.