Review: Needs an editor, stat!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 11 29, 2011
I'm halfway into the book.  The murder storyline is almost non-existent (lots of relationship stuff and sexual tension)  and there's a ton of grammar, punctuation, spelling, and tense errors. (note to writers: characters' POV should never be in present tense)I'll probably finish it to find out who-done-it, but the other reviewer that compared this to a Bones episode needs to re-think their measuring guidelines.2.5 stars - Honestly it wouldn't be a bad story, just needs a good pass with an editor who can tighten up the story and fix all the errors. On the plus side, it was free, so I'm not out anything but time.---------------------------------Update after finishing the book:Star score goes down the intangible half point to only two stars. The plot of the mystery is only barely mentioned in the whole book. 90% relationship stuff and 10% (because I'm feeling generous) is even related to the mystery. I'd hoped that the balance would get better after the initial relationship got laid out and they'd focus back on the mystery, but the second half of the book was nearly all relationship (lots of feelings and explicit sex - would NOT show book to my mother).The relationship part isn't all that bad. If I were the editor I'd recommend re-working the story to make the balance at least 65-35 relationship-mystery, along with fixing the other issues of grammar, spelling, punctuation, verb tense, etc.