Review: Needs a good editor/beta readers
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 1, 2013
Story was overly wordy, could have been cut simply by shortening phrases and dropping some unnecessary descriptions.  Wrong word choice more than a few times and the author needs to learn how to use commas properly--story suffered from what an old teacher of mine called the "comma shotgun."  There are problems with believability--not in the supernatural portions which require suspension of disbelief anyway, but in character behavior and the way things work in the real world.  There was no real suspense to the story, final confrontation with the "mysterious" Words with Friends opponent was too long.That said, I don't think the author is without potential, this particular story just failed to deliver.