Review: Good story line, however needs editing by a professional,
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 7, 2014
Good story line, however needs editing by a professional, or at least someone with good grammar, sentence structure and writing skills.  Many words are repeated rather than finding another suitable word, too much telling instead of showing: for example, at the bank she said there were a lot of undercovers (meaning agents).  Instead of describing them and how she spotted them for FBI.Developing motivation for their feelings, trust and relationship needs work as well.  Again, the story line is interesting however to want to spend money to find out what happens next I needs more professionalism.