Review: Great story
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 06 13, 2013
This is a very good story that captured my attention immediately. However, it was a little difficult to read. There is a problem with awkward sentences that I had to read, in some cases, several times before I got what was meant. Almost like English is his second language, which is possible. There are also a lot of run on sentences.The other thing was that information kept being repeated, like maybe I wouldn't remember it from reading it in the previous paragraph or chapter. My daughter calls this "feeding the puppy," a phrase she learned in her play writing class. I do recommend the story, though.