Review: good premise, poor execution.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 08 28, 2013
Good story plot, incoherent writing. Interludes, really? Classic case of all tell and no show. Thin to transparent characters, teen dialog coming from the mouths of seasoned naval veterans, incomprehensible conclusion derived the thinnest of evidence, situations so contrived that it would be comedy (dont panic) if it wasn't trying to be serious sci-fi. Ultimately this is a just an outline for a possibly good story. The writer needs to bring characters to life, learn realistic dialog, think things trough logically, and most of all learn to show, not tell.For a buck, I dont feel I was robbed or anything, and I encourage the author to keep trying. Very very few get it right the first time.2.5 stars.