Review: someone please get the author an editor
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 14, 2012
I am only at 29% and the page preceding and post this point use the words "the guy" no less than 9 times.  The POV transition is very poorly done.  Sometimes sentence to sentence but more often paragraph to paragraph.  What makes the transitions choppy?  They do not occur naturally in the story line and then the reader has to think is this Chase or Chad?  The names are so similar it's hard to keep up.  I've not finished books before because the content was not what I expected.  I have never not finished a book because the syntax was so bad I just couldn't do it.  This may be a first.  It is a short story so I am going to try and suffer through.