Review: Good story in bad need of a trim
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 3, 2011
I had mixed feeling about this book and almost put it down several times. While the author gets points for smooth flowing prose, hot romance and a good idea for a story, I give her poor marks for excessive exposition and back story, as well as ruining some of the suspense by telling us too much, too soon. I think the story would have been better if the truth about the heroine's brother would have been held back and only revealed when the hero found out.Back to the excessive exposition - There was so much of this that sometimes I'd have to back-track and remind myself of the last line of dialogue - there was so much junk in the middle, I forgot. Heck, if memory serves, the first 50% of the book spans less than 48 hours time. That's a lot of telling dragging the story down! On top of that the word 'wryly' (as in 'he though wryly' or 'she smiled wryly') was used 11 times. I thought I would gag if I read it one more time.On plausibility- The unprotected sex was odd - both for disease and contraceptive reasons. I mean, the author tells us every detail of everything else, and yet she doesn't have either lead address that. She also mentions more than once the heroine's book being picked up by multiple publishers. Since when? When an author is under contract--especially if the book(series) is doing well--the publisher is not going to share.Bottom line - If you don't mind sitting back and being 'told' a relatively good story, then you might like this. But if you like to dive in and *experience* your fiction, then look elsewhere.