Review: Could Have Been Better
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 4, 2011
The story was interesting and with a revamp or two could be better. The main trouble with it is that the girls are such brats that it is impossible to like them. In fact I was really hoping they would end up as victims. There is a small mark to denote a new section but the story could have been formatted a lot more neatly than it was. I actually think that stretched to novella length it could be a little better. The nurse side story was very interesting but handled way too quickly. Oh, a side-note to the author, it is ok to just write "she said" occasionally instead of constantly using other words.