Review: Still in Need of an Editor
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 23, 2013
I read another story by L.C. Zingera, and my advice for this one is the same: please, please, please find a decent editor.  The story, itself, is cute and sweet, with a nice little twist.  But Zingera writes one run-on sentence after another; it's actually so bad in some places it becomes very distracting.  There are commas in places where they don't belong and places in serious need of commas where there are none.The story revolves around Daniel, a wealthy business mogul; he's wealthy enough that he's well-known.  When his chauffeur is called away on a family emergency, Daniel finds himself driving his own limo home; tired from a long week, he stops for a cup of coffee.  In the coffee shop, he meets Lorianne, who is in the process of opening her own coffee shop.  Daniel is so taken with Lori he decides to take an unprecedented two weeks off; he volunteers to help Lori get her new place ready.  The catch is, Daniel doesn't tell Lori who he really is.Now that I think of it, there's another little interesting twist involving a "contest" for a million dollars.  Daniel's friend, Harry, is convinced if Lori had money but believed Daniel didn't, that she'd dump him; in an effort to prove this, Harry talks Daniel into giving Lori a million dollars under the guise of a contest.I'll stop with the description there as we're getting close to spoilers.  I wouldn't tell anyone NOT to read this story, but I can't give it a higher rating than 3 stars.  Please, Ms. Zingera, get an objective reader to edit your next book; find an officer in the Grammar Police and tell them, "You have to be cruel to be kind.  I can take it."