Review: A good story, but needs an editor to tighten it up
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 11 20, 2013
This was a good story.  It needs editing.  I'm not sure I remember any proof-reading issues, but an editor would have made the story much tighter and cohesive.  I'm not sure if it either needs to have been cut in half, to remove the excess, or been two volumes, to allow the writer to expand on the story.  I would definitely read another book from this author.My biggest irk, or the most memorable, is that the writer sets up this huge humiliation scene early in the book, just after the protagonist has a major success and both he, and the reader, are expecting praise or a reward.  There's no reason for the scene, there's no resolution the the conflict created, or the opportunities it might have brought.  It's not a bad scene at all.  But why is it there?  it should have been cut, or expanded to be relevant.