Review: Great Story needs editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 19, 2013
I loved this story. The world and magic are great. The stoey is a lttle choppy in places. It feels as if sections of the story are missing, such as when they *spoiler alert* free the captain the story jumps from planning to done without a lot of in between action.  Still love the story can't wait to see how it progresses