Review: Where is the character development?
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 26, 2011
Man, it's a good thing this was free. For one thing, it was short. There's nothing inherently wrong with a short story, but it's surprisingly hard to write a good short story, which this was not.There was no character development, which led to no emotional connection to the characters. When Wyatt gets shot by a crossbow (which Sara manages to walk around Chicago with, no questions asked) I simply felt no empathy for him. None at all.And there was the dreaded "I need you!" romance based entirely on the face that the two main characters had a fantastic  hookup for a week at some point last year. Hello, authors! Wake up, that's not how romance works!