Review: Good but author has room for improvement
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 08 5, 2013
I did enjoy the story, which is the most important thing, but the author needs to mature in her writing.The most glaring example of this happens at the end of the first chapter:"It felt good to finally be alone. The only problem? She wasn't"Writing like that implies your audience is stupid. Some may be, but best not to assume it. That last sentence is totally unnecessary. It reads, in many places, like my 14 year old wrote it, which isn't a huge compliment. The entire story felt rushed, especially the ending.... almost as though she was tired of working on it and was like ' oh hurry up and be over already'.It seems as though this may be a series. I may try the next when it comes out, but if significant improvement hasn't been made in verbiage, plot and character development, then it will be my last read from this author.