Review: Ok story but.....
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 7, 2014
LOTS of errors.... subject verb tense errors and word errors the premise of the story was good. I wanted to read more about the characters. It seemed like the author wasn't sure what details to include or which ones to  leave out. It didn't flow well. It was free. I think the author has potential but more work needs to be done.