Review: Good story w/ simple writing
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 07 5, 2012
I really enjoyed "The Relationship Shoppe."  It held my interest throughout and I was eager to keep reading to find out what was going to happen with each of the characters.  There were also very few typographical or grammatical errors, which was nice!  Kudos to the author on that!  She really seemed to put in the time and effort to polish the story before releasing it.My main criticism is that the storyline and characters seemed a little flat at times.  Not as much depth as I would have liked.  For example, a character would be in a fine mood at one second, and then something would happen (something relatively minor) and all of a sudden that character would lose it and have a fit.  The reaction seemed way too severe and not matching the cause.  Also, things seemed to jump around at times.  An example of this is a character (I'm leaving out names to avoid giving away the story) isn't sure how they feel about another character, or they say they don't really like them or aren't interested, etc.  Then in the next paragraph they're thinking of a future with that person.  What?!  Where is the build-up?  Where did that sudden change of heart come from?  These are the things that I felt were missing from the story.I felt the story got off to a great start.  The characters were built up well, described well, and I was interested in them.  But as the story went on, that is where things fell flat.  Gaps appeared in the plot/storyline.  Characters jumped sporadically from one emotion/feeling to the complete opposite.  I think the author has good potential and is skilled at telling a story, but needs more experience.  When I read it I didn't know anything about the author.  It felt like I was reading a first novel from a 20-something.  It wasn't until I went to post this review that I saw that the author is, in fact, more experienced in life, which surprised me.  All in all, however, I would recommend this story and this author to others and would be interested in reading other novels by this author.