Review: This Author Has Potential, But Also a LONG Way To Go
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 1, 2013
Blood and Justice had a good premise and an interesting villain.  The downside was the structure of the story and the grammatical shortcomings.This story would have benefited from being seriously edited and shortened.  Too much time was wasted on superfluous scenes and dialogue.  I understand that the author was most likely trying to develop his characters, probably with the intention of creating a series.The story felt padded and I found myself skipping over pages of unnecessary text.  What I took to be an attempt to build the suspense simply fell flat and made me impatient to get to the next relevant point.The ending was a perfect example of this as it was drawn out ad nauseam.The syntax was very odd, especially the jumbled tense usage.  Also jarring was the strange wording.  In one scene a character was described, when ending a phone conversation, as '...punching the Hang Up button'.  These points made this work seem like a not very successful high school English writing assignment.Finally, the rushed and unnecessary romantic angle was distracting and off-putting.  It is simply not believable that a mother who is living through the kidnapping of her child would have the mental capacity to start a romantic relationship, however preliminary, unless she had serious issues, perhaps bordering on sociopathy.I would encourage this author to invest time in writing and English classes to hone his craft.  Also, availing himself of the services of a skilled editor would go a long way towards producing a much sharper, more enjoyable story.