Review: OMG so much potential!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 5, 2014
...and yet. What a shame to actually publish something that still needs so much work! It is so hard to suspend disbelief and go with the story when Rodney suddenly becomes Rodent; for half a page Oliver becomes Oscar; when one character rests his hand upon another's soldiers; someone else is described as viscous as opposed to vicious ...So much of this story depends on various conspiracy theories that I almost threw the book across the room when a character is described as not having a cell phone because of the "irrational belief" that the government is tracking them. Irrational? Not these days.Still not sure what a "ling" is, but it breaks up a sentence somewhere. I can't say what page because Kindle doesn't give you page numbers. It's almost like it was *written* on a Kindle."Shelly turned her neck slightly and whispered as softly as we can could."huh?"The crowd jump to the ground gasping in terror."what was that now?"She rested Randall back onto the tile, whipped her face of tears and stood up."  Whipped tears? Is that some new kind of dessert?And I completely lost it at, "Several rattling thumbs vibrated throughout the car."I give up. What on earth could that possibly be?What a waste of time, effort, and bandwidth. At least give it a read through before publishing!