Review: A good one but better editing please!
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 10 3, 2013
"..The water sleuthed down his body.." English is not my mother tongue but the wrong use of this verb three times had me shaking my head in disbelief. Better editing is needed for this self published e-book especially when it is nearly 5 bucks. Writer should have more respect for his work and his readers! The editing problems aside, the writing style was engaging. It was very easy to just immersed in this enjoyable young love story. Both Rich and Johnny were likable. The story is from Rich's viewpoint (except one scene) but I could so picture Johnny, a huge bear of a man with his muscles, hair and food. Johnny's coming out was handled quite wonderfully. I also like the cast of supporting characters, especially both families' caring members who had no issues with both guys being gay. Rich's eventual reconciliation with his dad was a nice touching scene. However there were too much tears. I get that both guys were young, one in his teens and the other in his early twenties, but did they need to cry so much ? I have to mention the sex scenes which were not the usual pages after pages of repetitive boring positions. The sex scenes here were pretty raunchy and quite dirty in a sexy way. And the different tags to that organ between the legs have me chuckling aloud. A good read but please please edit your work better, Mr Vos.