Review: OK story but needs some work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 5, 2014
(Mild spoilers) I did like this story, even if far-fetched, but there were a few things that bothered me. First, Avery/Iris annoyed me. I get that she in young, but she is so immature in the way she treats Luke, I could never warm up to her. Her best friend gets out of the hospital from ODing and almost dying, yet Avery takes her to a bar and gets her a drink. Some best friend! And when Avery comes out of a 7 week coma she starts immediately talking and having serious long conversations with no problem. She's been in a 7 week coma and just like that she's awake and fine?!?However, my biggest problem with the book is the lack of editing. Several times the author puts in the wrong name - once on the same page she calls Luke "Luke" and then "Jake." She refers to Morgan's boyfriend as Max once (it's Tate) and calls Avery "Ade." There are many other grammatical errors and typos. This book could use a heavy dose of editing. For a free book I usually let it slide, but this book has a cliffhanger of sorts and if the author wants me to buy the next book(s), they had better be edited better. Ill wait to read the reviews before I decide.