Review: Star One: Tycho City: Discovery
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 14, 2013
I started this "book" knowing full well that it was a short story, basically setting up the premise for more books to come. It was short enough, and inexpensive enough, that if it didn't grab my interest, no loss.I'd call this "interesting", rather than "compelling". Not compelling in that it was no page-turner forcing me to keep reading. Too much detail for not much purpose. Some of the writing style is a bit too overt, such as the fore-shadowing. When done well, fore-shadowing can be part of the narrative without the reader even realizing it. One example, out of at least two, "wondered what else could go wrong. Little did he know that his problems were just beginning", is a bit in-your-face.Looking at some prior reviews, it appears editing is/was a concern. Perhaps the author has had this re-edited over time, because while I did notice errors, they weren't hideous errors. Some typos, a missing word or two. Comma usage is most visible: "know quite what it is if they do they're not talking". And at least one crash blossom: "their way over to some of the small thick windows trying to peer in". Were the windows trying to peer in? I understand the context, but a comma could prevent those.I would also point out the importance of designing character names to be visually different. LaRann and LeAnn, and Mase (does it rhyme with "mass" or "mace"?) and Jase.It does pique my interest enough that I will probably pick up "Neutron Star".