Review: Story was not enough to save it
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 27, 2014
Only a few chapters in. I hadn't come to a point where I couldn't read any further but I could tell based on what I'd read so far I was going to have to take notes in order to provide an honest review. I wanted to provide constructive criticism.Star rating subject to change as I read further… (have finished the book and I'll leave it at 2 stars but it's more like 1 1/2 stars)So far I've noticed exact phrases repeated more than once within a few paragraphs of each other which can be annoying. This gives the impression of beating a dead horse. You're trying to convey something to the reader so you feel if you repeat it enough we'll get it. It's not necessary. When I come across this it makes me think the author doesn't think I'm very intelligent, or that I have a short attention span (which I do usually but I think I can manage to retain information from one paragraph to the next).Wrong words used, poor spelling and bad grammar (I know I'm not one to talk about grammar) so far and I'm only a few chapters in.A couple of example of wrong words"I must of looked…" should be "I must have looked…""The idea was to appealing…" should be "The idea was too appealing…"Okay so have read a little bit further and I REALLY recommend this book be edited.All that considered I like the plot so far but I'm not far enough along to comment fully on it. Twice the word 'since' was used when sense was the intended word."…she got caught me looking at me." is a perfect example of an awkward sentence which just happens to be one of many.Having finished the book I can say that serious editing is required but beyond that the story is cute. Cute is really all I can say because I didn't develop any attachments to characters. I wasn't emotionally invested in the story. It evoked nothing in me really and for the most part I was distracted by the incredibly poor editing.