Review: Could be great with a little more work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 1, 2013
Hmm. First impressions, the two stories appeared to be a bit too pushed. At times I couldn't tell if the POV was first or third person. As much as I like a good transcendental work, these just didn't measure up.First short: Finding Home. Who was he/she looking for it? Is the character male or female? I ask this because in one of the first scenes, the main character is smoking and leaves lipstick on the butt. And was the being a real person or a lost soul inhabiting vessels of choice? Character development was thin at best. I didn't feel a connection with anyone until the very end and even then, it was marginal at best.Editing:  A few missing words here and there. Not enough to distract from the story. Easily remedied.What I did like was the cross between reality and the unknown. That was interesting, but it wasn't enough to overcome the main weaknesses.Second Short: Killing Tiffany HudsonThis is a collection of what appears to be a post apocalyptic/Zombie/End of Days/Armageddon Work. I'm still not convinced what the story is about other than the main character is an exterminator who along with a nasty weapon is able to conjure up an energy force which turns the enemy into a mass of goo.Again, the character development was shallow and rushed. I just couldn't feel anything for them as the curtain drew closed.The pluses: The main battle scene carries this novella. It's vivid, horrific, gory, well-paced and exciting. If the rest of the story were written with this passion, clarity and intensity, both of the works could easily be five star hits.Editing: a few minor issues of missing words; again, nothing to distract from the main theme.Overall, it's a three star work.