Review: Good Story, but Needs an Editor...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 9, 2014
The story of the Void contains extraneous scenes, information and characters. At over 600 pages, it could easily be brought to half that if it was tightened up.The premise is a good one, even if we never understand why the villains gain from bad things happening. The protagonists, Darren and Audrey are created well, and I followed their every move through the novel. The rest of the cast of characters are rather flat, even Jack, Darren's roommate, who works with our H/H to solve the mystery.While I am not a grammar zealot, I will warn those that are, you will find homophones, missing words, the to/too issue, extra words and so on. It started bothering me, and I am usually very tolerant.  D. Haltinner, invest in a real editor and your story is likely to be fabulous, as well as more focused, especially if you spend a bit more time on character development and the ending, and less on sweating ( mentioned way too many times ). Just my opinion, take it, or leave it.The ending was rushed and heavily foreshadowed. I don't know how many times, but so many, I felt battered. When it finally occurs there is no surprise or emotion, just an ' of course ' feeling, as the whole thing felt inevitable. I would have loved to know more about the history, what happened in '44, or the nature of that thing. Even the meaning behind Jack's password, as he didn't act like he knew anything. Ah the mystery!Bottom Line: Inside here was a compelling story with two great protagonists. The author has obvious talent, just needs an Editor.