Review: Terribly written, terribly edited
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 06 6, 2014
This is a terribly written and terribly edited romance novella.It's hard to imagine a cheesier and more played-out scenario than the playboy who is secretly in love with the woman who has been in his life all long.  In this case, the tissue paper thin excuse keeping them apart is the fact that the woman he loves is his sister's best friend and he's been forbidden (by his sister) from dating her.  So, of course, he decides instead to date women who aren't his type.The female main comes across as vaguely psychotic.  Her sudden mood swings (Kiss me!  Get away from me!  I want you!  You're a player, get away!) are disorienting.  Her stubborn refusal to believe the male main could be interested in her only makes sense once you realize that it is the only way Tegan could think of to get the story to work.This book doesn't appear to have been edited at all.  Most distracting is the swing between tenses -- it's distracting and jarring.In the right hands, this could be a simple and sweet romance about two people finding love.  The fact that so many reviewers are calling this "suspenseful" or a "breath of fresh air" and are citing "plot twists" is sufficient to question whether or not I actually read the same thing that they did.  Unless the download somehow was swapped for another once between their reading and mine, it's hard to square their experience with mine.This book reads like a teenager's attempt at writing romance.  If this is the case, keep at it -- but consider more editing before publishing your work and focus on making sure that your characters are consistent.