Review: Disappointed
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 26, 2014
I was disappointed with this free read. The plot is a great idea, and one that required multiple levels. I knew it would be tricky to develop the story so it would have all the right elements; suspense, fantasy, logical analysis of solving the crime. But after the crime itself, the writing did not live up to the ideal. There were too many situations that had to be sustained, without going all over the place, which the author did not control. The writing took a decidedly academic turn using the word segue to a nauseating point. And, then always using the word upon, as well. As I tell my college writers, vary your wording. It will be more interesting.