Review: Good story bad p.o.v. error and lack of contractions
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 18, 2013
The story us good but the author makes it hard to read because there are far too many words per sentence. The lack of contractions makes the book sound formal and read slow. This is not a college paper so contractions would make it flow better. There is too much telling/explaining when a reader smarts to experience. Lamer's previous books are first person and flow much better. I think maybe inexperience is to blame. Not as a writer but a third person p.o.v. writer. The story line would be so much better if the writing flowed.