Review: too cliched
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 11 3, 2013
While this story had a great premise it suffers from a few issues.  The action is jagged and not fully realized.  The focus seems to be to get through the story as fast as you can to get to the sex.  The heroine who starts out believable quickly becomes cliche  As a short story I can give a little on development but when a character devolves from a strong woman to a cliche virgin?  No.  I hope she gets better in her style for the author has some solid ideas that only experience will help her write better.