Review: Writing style left a lot to be desired
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 08 23, 2013
I love the "plot" of the book. Lowly hotel gal ends up working as the go to person for a visiting prince. The whole story was great up until she was in the same room as him. It almost seemed as if the author wrote the whole book with only one hand, if you know what I mean. The scenes were so rushed. "He did this, she did that, they did this, and it was done." Not even being able to call the "prince" or "his highness" by a name other than those mentioned was a real turnoff for me. I won't even get into editing, because that is something I can sometimes overlook. I am not the best with grammar and such, but I am also not an author. (Though, You would think those 2 go hand in hand.) All of a sudden about 90% of the way through the book, His Highness invites her to his home, and there has been almost NO conversation between the 2 up to this point other than "what do you do" or "where do you live".I usually don't write reviews for FREE books, because if it was a waste of time, at least it wasn't a waste of money. I was so enticed by the plot for the books, I nabbed all 3 for my kindle. The super short story, being free, and all being out right now was almost too good to be true, right? Yep! Too good to be true. Upon reading the 1st book, I immediately deleted it from my kindle library, as well as the 2 I haven't read. I have much better books to read- in my opinion.To sum it up- I imagine the author might be a 16 year old virgin just learning about her body, and writing what she envisions as hot, steamy, and sexy. To a 27 year old mother, this was NOT up my alley. Best of luck to the author, with a bit more conversation, back story, dialog, and ROMANCE... they could probably turn out a pretty heady story. 'Till then, not so much.