Review: Comes Across As Young Adult Writing. . .
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 1, 2013
This second book in the Beckett's Wolf Pack Series has a good plot and good bones.  The first three chapters are pretty well a summary of the first book.  All that should have been condensed more so this book could flow.  I was yawning over the repeated scenes, pretty much cut and paste, not even creatively given from a different viewpoint.  Sure a few added scenes were put in (food court). . .But the reactions from Alex and Butler were pretty well cut and paste from the first book of how Jase and Jackson reacted to Laurie.  Same reactions, same remarks to each other, same sniffing, same difficulties with communicating to her, same insecurities on her part. ..Lynnette Bernard, if you do read reviews, I hope you take my thoughts in mind.  I loved the concept of a compound of wolves and the pack and how these women come into their lives.  While there is a pack I only get a glimpse of about 10 people.  Yet I know this is a dude ranch type set up and a pack consists of more than a handful of members, the books don't give that world building background to where you realize the scope of Jace's job as pack leader.  They're never resolving difficulties until Mitchell shows up.  No one reporting in from the far corners of his territory.  I am left guessing.  Yes, the world building needs work.  CheckoutKiss of Snow (Psy-Changeling Series)- Read even the free first chapter.  Note the world building and pressures the pack puts on the alpha.  There's a lot more to it than the mate going missing.While I enjoy hearing the lead is pregnant, the same phrases coming from the same character get old really really fast.  And it wasn't just the housekeeper in Laurie's Loves that kept gushing over Jace and Jackson having a pregnant wife.  One gush was enough.  A reader notes what's going on and doesn't need the same thing said over and over and over and over.Now in Babies for Nikki I am about half way through as I'm writing.  I've noticed the same attention to detail that bogs down the reader.  One scene where the arm goes here, the leg is over here, his arm around the waist, she won't settle, get closer and snuggle..  But this goes on and one to where you get the idea of just how they're spralled.  That is one in one scene.  But the follow up bedroom sleep nest as Nikki is healing is the same type of description and honestly it does nothing to advance the story.  Why not call it a sprall and be done?  Why keep going on and on about who is laying in front and who on the right and instead focus on how the characters are advancing the agenda?  Why not have the doctor step in and see it from his point of view?Long ago when I took an English course in college my instructor mentioned wet water.  It's overly descriptive.  That is what I get when I read these books.  And yes they aren't cheap.  While I enjoy the romance and the overall thought behind the series, it needs more work before I decide to buy another book.  The way it is put together comes across as a young adult book.  But not with a MFM romance. Reminds me a lot of the Barbara Cartland Books I read ages ago in that the details overtake the story. -- Dan's wife