Review: First Part a Bit Boring, a Slighty Interesting Amateur Quality Story After That
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 31, 2012
Obviously from the cover this is a self published short story.  I always like to read stories by amateur writers as you find some really great undiscovered talent.  This is not one of those times, it wasn't a poorly written short story it just wasn't anything great either.  The first part goes for too long, I imagine a lot of readers would have stopped reading before the better part of the story starts (when the robots meet the human kids on the way to school).  Starts of using alien specific technical jargon a lot, although they are made up words you sort of have the feeling you do when someone uses insider technical jargon including acronyms for their workplace when trying to justify their actions and you are on the phone to them or something.  Bizarrely in a scenario where the aliens don't know much about humans, (hence why they need to send two information gathering robots to Earth) they have just had a war with Saturn where they battled the Uranians, so somehow they call the planets the same thing we do. Then we have a pretty boring getting ready for school scene.  Even though this is a short story, the boring introduction scenes needed to be much shorter.  Possibly a few more scenes involving the confused robots at school before meeting "Mom" would have been good too.  I also didn't buy that the kids would let the robots do what they do, surely they'd know that's wrong and they'd get in trouble for that.The whole thing isn't that long, it will take you maybe twelve to fifteen minutes at most to read. Once you push through the boring first half it is somewhat interesting, but overall is nothing brilliant.