Review: Cute, light story but was not proofread
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 20, 2013
It's not "wines" it's "whines," not "your" it's "you're." And the phrase is "I couldn't care less" not "I could care less" cause if you COULD care less then why don't you? It doesn't look like it was self published, but even if it were, please have someone proofread your work! (if I have a grammatical mistake in this feedback, feel free to laugh at me). And seriously, find a better pet name for the woman you love, not "beautiful girl" or "baby". Most people reading romances probably aren't girls, we're women, really juvenile pet names aren't an endearment, it just shows lack of creativity or thought.I haven't finished the book yet, I'm a little more than half through it, but it's nothing exceptional. Girl looking for love and family meets boy who has never been serious, but wham they're together with very little drama (yet anyway). The amount of PDA is a little much, granted they're in college, but even when I was in college I would have been disturbed if I saw friends that way. Usually that much PDA means you're very insecure or your relationship is just about the physical. The characters don't have much depth. Everything just seems too easy and perfect for them, even the fact that her parents died when she was young was not a source of conflict... She could have witnessed it and had nightmares or barely survived herself or struggled with money or feelings or not being worth as much, but no, she's beautiful and smart and everyone immediately loves her. He's the football star with a great future. Cause that's every reader's life and we can all relate, right?If you don't really care about spending a few bucks on a book, it's not a terrible read, but if I were pricing it (for the Kindle version) it wouldn't be worth more than $0.99.