Review: It could have been a charming story but...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 28, 2013
I found the plotline somewhat charming.  In addition to the H\h there are several additional relationships that develop that tie the characters together.  As so frequently happens with Kindle romance novels, though, the editing for this book is terrible.  Other reviewers have described the run-on sentences, terrible misuse of commas and periods, awkward sentence structure, and misuse and misspelling of words - and these descriptions do not exaggerate.  In several instances, it reads as if different phrases or clauses in a sentence have been reversed to create the awkward phrasing.  I love stories that draw me in and make me feel as if  am there. Sadly, this author rarely demonstrated her ability to do that.  On the rare occasions when she allowed the story to be told by the characters' dialog and actions, promise of a budding author shone through.  The rest of the time, it felt like just too much work.  Telling the story without much dialog had the added negative consequence of failing to stay true to the period.  First name references to characters who have only recently met is but a single example.  Repeatedly, characters are referred to by first name rather than by appropriate title or address.  Even when a later reference mentions offering first name status, the damage already is done.  What a shame to fail to do due diligence when undertaking critical research, proofreading, and editing tasks.  It is beyond reasonable thought to understand why the author thanked her proofreader.I do not want to be overly critical since I think the book could have merit if edited competently.  In its current form, two stars for this book is generous.