Review: Ummm... no, just no. TERRIBLE
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 8, 2014
I spent most of the time reading trying to get directional cues down and then who was who.  No real substance here, but the idea was a good one. Execution not so much so... At this point I would say the description is better written than the scene, because this in no way qualifies as a short story.I am happy that it was free.  And now I happily delete it from my Kindle.