Review: Entertaining, but needs a bit more editing.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 3, 2014
I love erotic fiction, really I do, although rarely do I find much of it very erotic. So I was pleased when I was given a free copy of this book in exchange for an honest review. It’s described as M/F/F menage erotica with BDSM, and the book is part one of the "Purr Billionaire Series." No, it’s not the story of rich felines, but one of love and bondage among the rich. The story’s a quick read and it held my attention throughout, although in my opinion it could have benefited from a bit more time at the editing table.Here's the plot: two CEOs want to do business together in more ways than one. The male half of the pair schedules an appointment after lunch and before the female CEO's three o'clock appointment. He has a pair of handcuffs with him. I think you can see where this is going, right?Oh, the story also contains the following sentence: "his *** swelled to ginormous proportions."I don't know, it’s hard to take a book too seriously that uses the make-believe word "ginormous" in such a manner. There were other word choices that I found a little off-putting, and they did take me out of the world being created, too. Also, the story contained several chapter break errors and a mad mix of smart versus dumb quotes.Finally—although let’s be real, one does not read these for the soundness of the plot—I did find the structure upon which this story was based to be a little shaky. Here's what we know about the female CEO: "Ever since she splashed into the food science industry as the newest and youngest CEO voted in by her board, he had been following her career. Not only was she the youngest CEO in her company at the time, she was also the youngest in the science industry. Didn't have her degree in marketing or business either--just English."Excuse me, how is this possible? Not only is she impossibly young, but she hasn't majored in anything that would even remotely land her a CEO gig in such a short period of time. Nothing in science, or agriculture, or business, or marketing. No comparable work experience that we know of. So, how in the world did that talent search go? No wonder Monsanto is having so many problems.That said, I read the entire book in one sitting, and I was entertained throughout. I think the author just needs to invest a bit more time in judiciously editing her story, to make sure the word choice is solid and the facts we are presented with make logical sense: for example, where does the male CEO produce all the items he uses during the story, including the handcuffs? Or, would the female protagonist really be able to do all she did while cuffed? Some additional time spent honing in on the fine details would really give this kitty a bit more bite.