Review: Great Story Idea
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 8, 2013
The germinal idea here was brilliant but the author was not able to make us feel it. The premise of this story was unique and fresh, it was the word crafting that faltered. The descriptions of the effects of withdrawal should have had our stomachs twisted in knots...but it didn’t. The subtle manipulations of fate were too subtle, we should have felt terror...but we didn’t. Even the author, in the ending chapters felt he had inadequately told his story because he felt the need to explain what had been going on. A case of tell not show...kind of like those stories that end with...and then he woke up for a terrible nightmare...B.L. Hewitt author of the Mac & CiCi McConnell Thriller series