Review: Disjointed
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 04 16, 2014
A First Attempt? The story didn't flow well, for me. Totally out of sync with the time this story is set in, and very little character development. Every paragraph just left more questions, and the whole story left me dissatisfied as a reader. Many grammatical/spelling errors throughout made me twitchy. Needs Editing, character growth, better dialogue. The plot sounds like it could be an enjoyable story, but didn't pan out.