Review: Come on, not this again!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 14, 2011
Way to many commas, the characters all sounded stilted like bad actors who are having a hard time remembering their lines.  I don't think I've heard the word whilst used so many times in my life, let alone in one book.  I also noticed that the auther put the word 'when' in places where 'and' would have been more appropriate.I found Jessica to be far to trusting and Flint to be far to matter of fact.  I like stories to be realistic, even when dealing with myths, and in real life most people aren't that trusting and people don't just go straight to the facts.  They hedge avoiding the matter for as long as possible, especially if it's an awkward subject.All in all, while I'm not entirely sure that writing is the right calling for this person, I think that if she uses a little more modern language and takes a few grammer lessons she could be a good writer.