Review: This story is all over the place...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 11 23, 2012
I think this story needed a prolog, a little background of what the mission was for this team would have made more sense, actually more in depth on every scene would have made this story overall better and I'll tell you why...1. Hawke is rock star, and I get that can help with this undercover mission of finding the terrorist however, last time I checked...SEALS don't do missions like this, more like CIA or some other federal agency. SEALS do very top secret missions that no one knows about bc their life and death missions so I can't truly believe them being SEALS, more like detectives or CIA. A little more info on the rock star/SEAL thing would have been more helpful from a character background perspective.2. Rachel, I get she has a past with past relationships gone wrong and I like the cat and mouse game she plays with Hawke but wow i thought she was a little shallow and how many years did it take to get THAT successful in being an architect? I would have like to get a little peak into that success story. When she gets drugged at the gala I think a hospital scene would have been nice to get more of a "we need to investigate this" setting so the story of the mission gets more detailed.3. Cameron is a spit fire and I liked her in the beginning but towards the end I really wanted to smack her bc when her and Rachel's lives are at high risk, they brush it off like no big deal bc they have a schedule to keep (I would like to know why an interior designer and an archetict are doing a fireman calander shoot bc it was never explained just put into the story) its as if they want to get killed by the terrorist which by the way WE NEVER HERE FROM HIM! I wanted to know what he planned to do while his "packages" were being intercepted and what he needed his lackeys to do about it which would explain the random drugging and shooting and rounded out his part of the story.4. You can't get a real sense of time in this book, at first its days and a week but when certain events happen like when Hawke and Rachel fly to Sacramento it's done in a snap...huh? Hawkes house being burned, the only justification for that is the frame work was the only thing that saved that bc if the house was nearly finished I would been seriously questioning those construction workers!5. Max, I like him to and he handles Cameron really well and her over the top sassy mouth, I think there was too much dialogue between the two and the main characters had very little so you can have that relationship build up better.6. Where was the romantic relationship at in this book? Again I liked the cat and mouse game but the development of that relationship was not there. There was no build up really and they only had one actual love scene, which was really good, and then they fall head over heals in love after the very short action scene with the terrorist at the end and then they get married...probably have babies after the epilogue...happily ever after...WTH?There were a lot of story hole that I think the author try to cover and couldn't. It felt like the SEAL mission was rushed and not explained well and not as much character development and I would have hoped for the first book of this series.I'm on the fence with reading the 2nd book, maybe it answered the questions I had for this book. There were a lot of positive responce for the other books in the series so I might give them a second chance...