Review: This reads like an afterschool special provided you remove the sex scenes
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 18, 2012
This was an okay story line. I like that it didn't follow the same tired and overly done virgin girl meets rich boy. That's where all the positives end. Unfortunately, the negatives far exceed the positives. Starting off with the word "into" its one word please learn to use it properly. That is just an example of a small irritant the larger ones were: server lack of character development - outside of a paragraph delivered by a secondary character's monologue of some childhood experiences we do not get to see how the male protagonist processes the information.  We're not even told how he came to terms with it and changed his mind. The same can be said for the female protagonist outside of her parents' accident we know nothing about her internal process which leads to a story without any conflict. The day trip to Vegas followed by the use of sex to turn the situation around appeared bogus and rushed. It appears way too much of the story took place off book which made for an anti-climatic story that tried to use tepid sex scenes to add drama to a rather dull story.It appears this writer has a creative mind, but some writing classes/workshops are needed to learn the art of show rather than tell and plotting with build-up to conflicts and climaxes. Storytelling is what this book needed above and beyond the numerous sex scenes which said nothing other than two horny people hooked-up the end. I would not recommend.