Review: An Improving Author!
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 04 21, 2012
I recently reviewed a previous short story from this author and was interested to see if he'd progressed as a writer. I'm happy to say yes!This story is tighter with his dialogue, although there is work needed to be done, if I'm being honest. The two characters are unique and I could tell them apart, although I think there is still too much 'stating the facts' about their lives instead of showing the reader. Case in point: one character has friendship bracelets from his kids. Instead of the other guy asking him simply 'are those from your kids?' he could be fidgeting with them when nervous and worried about his girls, then slipping them in instead of a simple info dump. Obviously just my opinion.As for the story itself... after reading two stories from the author I am getting a very old school "Twilight Zone" vibe to his writing, and I like that. So many writers today are relying on the shock, profanity and blood and guts to tell a story, and whenever I find something like this as a reader i enjoy it. He also keeps it wide open, allowing the reader to fill in the gaps with your own imagination, which doesn't always work. But in the case of this story it did.Armand