Review: Confusing and more bad grammar
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 17, 2013
There are many points that just made me go 'huh?' during the read.  First off, most of the story is set in and around Boston.  Obviously the author is a Boston boy, and tries his best to make you never forget it.  The constant mentions of street names is simply lost on anyone who doesn't live there.  I'm sure he's trying to go for a hometown feel, but that only works for people intimately familiar with the area.  To the other 98% of the readers, all the local call-outs are simply glazed over.And of course, he had to include another EXTREMELY graphic sex scene.  It wasn't a fitting moment in the story....it was blatant porn.  Which is fine....but it just doesn't belong in this story.  You could've skipped the scene and not lost anything to the story.  I'm far from offended, but the scene goes on for nearly 5 kindle pages  If I wanted all out porn, that's what the internet is for.The same problem with commas continues in this book.  They are either misplaced or totally missing, and makes for an unsettling, troubled read.  It just doesn't flow with a natural rhythm.And then there's the tank.  They manage to steal a tank right out of the hands of the remnants of the US Army, then proceed to trade it for gasoline, with the stipulation that they can use the tank when needed.  So....the clan decided to declare all out war on the army.  They are outnumbered, mostly out gunned, and scrabbling for survival.  But they forgot they have use of a main battle tank, that would have easily tipped the scales vastly in their favor?  It seems the whole tank angle was touched on, then forgotten.  (though how they got the tank requires you to completely suspend reality)I'll check out part 3, but my hopes aren't up.