Review: Start the New Year the Way You Want to End the New Year
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 14, 2013
This is the 2nd short that I've read by this author.  While I still have a couple of issues, none have to do with the writing style or the actual intimate scene.Personally, I prefer the couple in my erotica to have a history together.  While they had met before Jessica and Brandon just happened to work in the same company. When her computer crashes he comes to fix it and they flirt a bit.  They both attend their company's New Year's Party and well it goes on from there.Now to my issues, everything he says sounds like what any guy would say to get a woman into bed.  There is mutual attraction and lust.  There is flirting and admiration for the other's physical attributes.  However, there is no feeling of discovery between the two.  For me it read He's cute, she's cute, do you wanna, yes I do and they did.  And there is nothing wrong with that between two adults, it just isn't what I'm looking for.  I'm looking for what actually makes them connect.What also struck me as odd was the concept of a company's New Year's Eve Party.  It seemed a false gimmick.  I have never heard of such a thing, (though it may exist), it would have been more "realistic", if he had asked her out for New Year's at a nonwork place. It would have allowed more couple building intimacy.  I can think of no worse place to be than at a work event on New Year's Eve.  Home alone sounds better. Even Peter's scene could have been reworked to incorporate that change.Given the above, I still enjoyed the writing.  Though some of the story elements are common they were told well.  I truly wanted to punch Peter. To be frank I enjoyed the story more up until the New Year's Party as the last scenes seemed to be rushed to get all the action in.  I think another 10 pages could have been used to develop the feelings that just seemed to appear in the last chapter.So even though I would have preferred more couple building, it is still a decent time pass read.