Review: Confusing narrative and dialogue - totally disconnected story
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 08 16, 2013
Where do I start? I really wanted to like this book because it was recommended by someone. I just couldn't. When reading an indie book I'm usually pretty forgiving with the spelling and grammar mistakes. But when it gets to a point of needing to read sections a few times just to understand what's going on, it's not acceptable. The dialogue was beyond confusing as Green didn't understand the proper formatting of dialogue, so you often thought the wrong person was speaking. A major distraction! I won't get into my pet peeve of mixing up your and you're but the part I liked the least in this style of writing was the narrative. It was told from third person but from paragraph to paragraph the point of view changed from person to person.The descriptions used were lacking, majorly. Like describing things as looking "Science-fiction" - instead of actually just describing what was happening.  The names were a huge distraction too - Egor, Carr,Skye, Alf, Jaz, Driver? Though, if that were the only thing that bugged me I wouldn't have even mentioned it.The things that mattered, like her finally accepting that she were turning into a Were, was brushed aside in passive narrative. Yet, the author spends pages describing a gym. Almost as if she were afraid to take on the bigger moments. Also, it seemed like Jaz (the main character) all of a sudden had an understanding of certain things that were happening, or people around her, or even the workings of the village without explaining to readers how she knew. There were too many disconnects throughout the story. Some parts felt very rushed while others felt dragged out. Even the main character's age seemed off. She's studying psychology in college. Yet she acts more like a bratty teen at times with her inner monologue. She didn't seem like a student of psychology at all.I hate giving books 1 star and rarely do - this one couldn't be helped. I'm surprised I'm the first one to do this for this book.