Review: This story had potential, but.....
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 11 5, 2013
I really wanted to like this story, and the beginning started out pretty good. However after the first night in the hotel room, the story went down hill pretty fast. It's kinda funny, because I had to keep reading to see what would happen next... Sorta like a bad crash or something.The Grammar was not the best, it was actually pretty bad. That said, I generally don't knock a good story down because of that.Here is a list of what bothered me throughout this story.*** SPOILERS******1. The Sex Scenes: To begin with, they were just mediocre, then they became laughable. It was suppose to be the best sex she ever had, and yet she always had a running commentary in her head. Even thinking about her BFF during the second sex scene.... (How great could it actually be?)2. The story took place in 1999. I was 20 years old then, and I can say with certainty that I never used "LOL" in an email. As a matter of fact, My niece who is now almost 22, brought me up to speed with text messaging, which is when acronyms  like "LOL" became popular... I think she was in high school?3.  She hates to cook and is horrible at it. What is the first thing she wants to change when she moves into Flints house? THE STOVE!!!!  She wants to change it from Gas to Electric!!! Ugh and eye roll....4. At first I felt sorry for her. Then I felt sorry for him.... She was extremely annoying and whinny.