Review: Ok premise, but plot needs work and the whole thing needs *serious* editing
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 1, 2014
As other reviewers have said, the plot was all over the place - too many tangents that made no sense.  It seemed as if pieces from several paranormal genres were cobbled together without a cohesive theme. That was bad enough but the writing made some parts even more impossible to follow.The writing issues: misuse of words, incorrect tense, poor grammar, lack of commas, incomplete sentences, wrong use of character names (one character was speaking but the dialogue was written as if someone else were speaking), the same name spelled differently even on the same page (it was Lea then Leah then back to Lea), etc.Kindle self publishing has been around long enough that I cannot fathom why some books are not edited. If someone cannot afford a professional editor, at least find a friend with a decent grasp of Engish to take a look.