Review: Too many mistakes, unrealistic
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 08 27, 2013
I did not care for this book.  Firstly, the sheer number of grammatical and typographical errors in this book had me hard pressed to finish it.  There were misused words (ex. hurtle instead of hurdle), missing words, doubled words (ex. two different verbs, as if the author wasn't decided on which to use, but never deleted one in the rewrite), missing commas, misplaced commas, spelling typos, etc.  It clearly lacked proofreading.  It also lacked editing, as it was SO far from realistic.  I could not get behind much of the action because of this.  These characters were not real to me because real people in these positions would not do these things.  All the way from the professional aspects of the characters' jobs down to the reaction of a mother or a stalking victim just didn't ring true.  There were a few holes in the story, as well.  How in the world did the police have a birth certificate, which obviously should have the child's name on it, and also have the name of the suspect that came to the father's hotel, and not put two and two together?  They needed to make sure the Robert McAllisters were one and the same father?  This is just one example of how many times I wondered how dumb everyone was.  There also seemed to be some inconsistencies with the villain's motivation and the backstory and clues that went with it, as if the author figured it out as it was written and didn't go back to rewrite and set things straight.  There were also way too many cliches and trite words and phrases found in so many romance rags.  I think this writer has potential, because despite all that, this book is better than some other free downloads I've tortured myself with.  Just beware.