Review: Rousing But Very Flawed
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 09 26, 2013
The author needs to make a study of style and edit this story ruthlessly. He switches between present tense to descibe his characters and past tense to describe action, making for awkward prose. The prose is self-indulgently overwritten, needing drastic pruning. The story itself is rousing and has potential, but it's killed by its freshman level style.