Review: Terrible and just plain weird
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 05 8, 2014
This is free and very, very short, I get that quality writing is probably not going to happen, but this was ridiculous. The story is fast paced but the directional cues are missing. She goes from summarising her financial situation while serving customers in the restaurant to all of a sudden getting hit by a car? So she wasn't working but walking home after work. I realize that writing the scene this way is intended to make the reader jump out of their seat, be as jarred as she is, and be disoriented. I was just plain confused, but I continued reading because a lot of these freebie books have trouble setting up a story but then the writing gets better as the plot develops. Not here as the timeline wavers back and forth, her recovery is dismissed and all of a sudden it's the next weekend or the following weekend or I don't know when and she back at work all her bruises gone and some "cool scar" on her forehead....But folks this is no ordinary scar it is magical because now she can enter the dreams of her biggest tipper: the youngest billionaire in the world. Oh! Of course! And she knows just how to pay those medical bills now: give him the woman of his dreams, what he really wants.Some light female dominance ensues which reads as stunted and ridiculous. There was a good story here if only it could have been fleshed out a lot and that stupid magical scar zapping nonsense was gone. This whole, thankfully short, disaster reads as if Krista Lakes jotted down some ideas for a story and said why edit this I'll just make it free so no one will complain about how terrible it is.Krista why would you do this to yourself? Her other books are quite good and this is such a terrible mess that if I had read this first I never would have read anything by her again. Take my advice and try something else by her and you'll believe that this couldn't possibly be written by the same author as "Sandcastle Kisses" which is another billionaire story and currently also free on kindle.If nothing else this little short has taught me that authors do have off days and maybe I shouldn't always judge an author by the first book that I read. But this was still an awful story.