Review: I ALMOST Love My Breakup
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 03 3, 2014
I really like the concept of the book and where Sabrina Lacey is trying to go. Jess is pretty funny as a character, but sometimes I found myself laughing at her, instead of with her. She comes off as somewhat ditsy in her speech. Also, the stream of consciousness is overused. It's nice to see the thought process but Jessica seems to express every single thought. Sometimes less is more, especially when she's talking about trivial stuff like her job in fashion--it is important to know how she feels about her job but it seems like a lot of time is wasted on explaining the disdain--just to justify why she drinks in the afternoon. I do, however, like that Lacey shows the process Jessica goes through when deciding whether or not to go through with the internet hookup. This was a great way to show what women go through and how they think men see them. It is also nice that she got to make all of the decisions leading up to Mark getting there.The sex scenes are great and create a nice image. My only concern with those scenes is the telling rather than showing. As a reader I was taken out of the scene with the constant "He did this" then "I did this" and next "He touched, reached, grabbed, etc." syntax. I understand it's difficult to explain something without telling, but the construction could've flowed better with sentences like: My sex tightened as he blew on my neck. As his sexy lips placed soft, yet, determined kisses on my neck I grew wetter in anticipation. His hands gripped my bottom tight as he pressed his hard cock into my pelvis. Though we still had our clothes on I knew climax was close.... Writing like that keeps the fluidity of the scene. When the actions are listed it reads as choppy.The last thing I would eliminate would be the onomatopoeia. A lot of times during the sex scenes sounds are written like "bam bam" for him thrusting hard and "boom boom boom" for the sound of her heartbeat. They are just unnecessary because the reader can hear the sounds based on the imagery created from adjectives and action verbs. The onomatopoeia take away from the great imagery that come before.I know it seems like there is a lot of negative here, but this actually means this story is very good and has potential to be great. The reader wants it to read as hot and sexy and continuous and it unfortunately doesn't read that way. I really like that Jessica owns her sexuality and isn't afraid to scream it in a crowded restaurant. A little disappointed that this didn't consist of all four parts but Sabrina Lacey does make a good point of just giving the reader a taste so they can decided if this a good choice for them. Very smart. I will probably read the other three parts because I want to know what (if anything) happens between Jessica and Mark. I kind of hope something does because Mark seems like a great character, but then again I hope she meets other guys so she doesn't get caught up too quickly and fall in love before she's healed from her relationship with David.Definitely recommend this book if you want something fun, light, and sexy to read. I'm overly critical, I know, but this a nice pleasure read. JUST KNOW THIS IS NOT THE ENTIRE NOVEL!!!!!