Review: Great story line but in need of editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 1, 2013
Overall the story line was great.  It was sweet and romantic and had a few unexpected turns to keep it interesting.  However, it was written in the third person.  I have read my share of romance novels and never have I read one that was written in the third person.  I feel like this point of view made it difficult to follow at times.  The author attempted to share the thoughts or feelings of characters, but it only confused me as to what was going on.  From this perspective there is a lack of character development.  I feel like the characters had great potential, but we're never developed.  As the reader I like to feel immersed in a story; feel what the characters are feeling and know their innermost thoughts and fears.  That simply can't happen in this perspective.  I feel like the story line was underdeveloped and at times felt rushed; almost like watching a movie in fast forward.  The sex scenes also felt rushed and undeveloped.  It was like the author skipped over parts all together and rushed through others.  You couldn't connect with the characters' feelings or emotions at all during these scenes.  The grammar and punctuation need work as well.  I feel like the book has the potential to be good if it were written from the perspective of the characters and properly developed.