Review: Not what I expected
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 14, 2014
I felt out of my league reading this book, and I honestly felt that I was the wrong audience, not because it's a F/F, but because I prefer to read grammatically corrected books by a qualified editor. I also understand that these errors don't bother every reader, and if that's you then please buy away.The story itself moved quickly and the steamy sex scenes were fine, but the grammatical errors threw me for a loop. Speech tag errors were abundant as was improper phrasing. I do understand the type of woman portrayed here, and her natural speech patterns are a bit rough. I highlighted (as I read) the out of character bits, and the improper phrases that stumbled the reading, and interrupted the overall flow. Without those grammar issues, I would have given the book a higher star rating. A thorough edit could help shake out the decent plot hidden behind the sea of dialogue and trash-speak. Ah the dialogue spewed with backstory and info dumps, lots of screaming and yelling, improper use of the ellipsis, and I could go on forever. At one point my screen filled with a giant wall of text.There was quite a bit of language in the book, I state it not as a problem, but it's something I note in all reviews. In no way did it reflect my overall rating, but I'd still suggest a less is more approach because curse words can cause distraction or weaken the dialogue.