Review: A few words of advise, Jeremy
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 7, 2014
You had four to six months from the posting of reviews on this first book until the release in January, 2014, of your second book.  Reading the reviews on Book II, it is apparent that you blatently ignored nearly every reviewer's advice to employ (or utilize the free offers from many) the services of a proofreader / editor. I found myself greatly distracted from the enjoyment of reading a captivating story by the sheer density of puntuational and gramatical errors.  One reviewer put forth a number of 50 errors in the book. I would place the number closer to 1000-1500.I liked the story, the premise, and the characters.  I did not 'enjoy' reading the book - it was a trial and an effort beyond any book I've ever read.  I got my Kindle for Father's Day 2013, and have read 40 - 50 ebooks since receiving it.  Bug Out is hands-down the least proofread book I have purchased.  Ignoring your misuse of the words 'set up' and 'setup', than and then, there and their, are and our, along with to and too, accompanied by a total disregard of the difference between an & and.I call into question numerous continuity lapses - such as the night trip of James and Miranda that begins at nightfall in November (5PM?) and ends eight hours later "an hour after sunrise" at… 1AM? (7AM?). Where did the six hours go?  You had them take a "quick break" three hours into the trip, yet during this break they were "warming their hands at the fire". What fire? They were trying to maintain a low profile - Sean would NOT have started a fire.Sean is critically injured by a bullet preforating his liver, but pulls through thanks to Dr. Teddy.  Two days later you have him helping Jason move a 200-pound cast-iron stove and split firewood.  The next day he drags a "good-sized doe" through forested, hilly terain for thirty minutes. Oh, and you wrote that he "drug it out of the forest" - from where else would he be dragging it?A sentence should not end in a preposition - like the words 'to' and 'from' - for example.  A correct useage is in the last sentence of the preceeding paragraph.You don't know when to use a hyphen, em-dash, en-dash, comma, or period.  Your sentences run together using 'and' and 'and then' when clairity of thought would be better served ending the sentence with a period and starting a new sentence to convey the new thought.Because it seems that you have NOT taken the advise of Bug Out's readership and made some attempt to redeem your deplorable lack of editing in you first book by having it done on Book II before releasing it, I will chose to NOT buy it for $3.99.  I cast my vote with my wallet, and you wil not laugh at me all the way to the bank. You ignore your readership at your own peril. Email your readers when you have provided a "finished" piece of work.  You are trying to sell for top-dollar a fine quality dining room table that has not yet been sanded, stained, laquered, waxed, and buffed to a mirror finish. Instead, what we are getting is a table made from recycled rough-sawn mahogany shipping pallets. Good wood - bad presentation.As a parting thought, Dodge City is a Proper Noun. You failed to use capital letters when you over-used the phrase: 'get out of dodge'. This should have been the title of your book, since you used it six times.  I don't recall any of your characters saying 'bug out' at all.