Review: Story just didn't gel for me
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 23, 2014
This book was difficult to get in to. Very little character development, so I wasn't able to connect to the heroine or any other characters, and the story is told in a choppy, "I did this then he did that" way. Having chapters switch to other characters' points of view didn't work, because it was inconsistent and the voices weren't differentiated enough to be distinctive. The main character is a witch, and I grew tired of reading the word "spell" every paragraph. I did a search on my kindle, and the words spell, spells, spelled, or spelling were used 326 times. How about incantation, procedures, instructions, or even recipe? Everything was just presented up front, as in, "I got a rock. I put runes on it. Runes will help track." Most difficult for me was the repetition of certain phrases, often in the same paragraph, for example (I'm paraphrasing) I was hungry. I wanted a pizza. I said,  "I'm hungry, I want to get a pizza." Speaking of pizza, every thing the main character eats is lovingly, needlessly described, but other people, what they're wearing or feeling, is not. One character was dismissed without explanation as "too good to be true." Why? Don't you want to find out why he did what he did? Lastly, the heroine came across as a somewhat unkind and prudish, which killed any sympathy I might have had for her. All in all, it was a chore to finish. I gave it two stars for potential and for the author finishing the book, but it could really use a re-write...and a thesaurus.