Review: Run of the mill
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 28, 2013
Unfortunately, this short story is too short to develop the characters fully and the plot is not fresh. Most bothersome for me is the lack of punctuation (the author has forgotten to put periods at the ends of sentences) and the lack of commas where they are needed (to separate long run-on sentences). Those oversights are distracting and they took me out of the story. Self-published authors need to understand the mechanics of writing in order to get the story across in an understandable way and provide an enjoyable experience for the reader.