Review: Horrible, Childish Writing
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 05 23, 2014
A king and queen appoint a butler to be godfather to their children, and he is subsequently preyed upon by an evil sorceress. There is some goblin fighting and an attempt at a quest in there as well. Unfortunately, I was too distracted by the poor writing to catch much more of the plot. There are far too many asides which kept me from being able to follow the story line.I am a fan of all things fantasy, but this book is dreadful. I could not force myself to be interested in the characters, and I could not follow the plot. From the very beginning, the narrative is full of information dumps written in a pretentious style. The pretense dies down, however, as the story continues. I don't think the author was able to keep up the haughty style for too long.What killed this story is the over abundance of proofread errors. They are literally on every page. The author does not know how to use a comma, when to capitalize, and there are far too many run on and incomplete sentences. There are also too many repeated words, and poorly chosen words (such as the outdated and racist word "oriental" to refer to items of Asian craft - this is 2014!). To top that off, the author tends to write dialogue in all capitals (example: BWAHAHAHAHA), and is in essence, screaming at his readers. It was as if I was reading an internet post by a raging child.What sounded like a promising fantasy tale turned out to be a hot mess. I apologize, but I absolutely have nothing nice to say about this book.I was given a free copy in exchange for an honest review.