Review: Great story that needed better execution
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 29, 2014
I really wanted to like this book, and I did find myself drawn to the story, but I kept getting yanked out of it by a combination of writing style and copyediting errors.  I should state up-front that I have copyedited many books, and have a pretty keen eye, so this may not have bothered most people the way it does me.The style is mostly a subjective thing, but I did feel that some of the dialog was stilted and awkward, and there were many times when I felt like the author was (over)stating the obvious.  The copyediting issue is very unusual for DarkFuse titles, which are almost always exceptionally clean, and I have read many of them as a very satisfied member of their book club.I'm willing to give his work another try, because I do feel that at the root of it this was a good story, it just got buried under too many issues for me to overlook.