Review: Underwhelmed
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 5, 2013
I was glad that this short story was at least pretty well edited, however it still felt a lot like a draft and not a final product. The dialogue was not very realistic and the switching of tenses was distracting. Most of the story is told by the female MC in first person. But once in a while we get the man's POV and it switches to third person.There was a whole lot of telling and summarizing of info and backstory that I feel could have been told in a more effective way that would have helped me to feel a real connection to the characters. As it was, I didn't feel much of a connection at all.There were some sweet and tender moments between the MCs, but overall I was just waiting to get to the end.