Review: FREE is TOO Much!
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 22, 2012
It is because of books/stories like these that I beg for a 0 rating!This story lacked everything that makes it anything besides emotionless, dry, elementary sex.PLEASE READ IF YOU LIKE:Sentences such as- "He moaned. I was in heaven. He slid his arm around... I grunted as he continued to... He breathed against my face. I moaned. He shivered." I kid you not this is ALL this story is about. The sentences all sound like someone was making a list for a secretary and checking them off one-by-one. I have read YA scenes that were steamer and better written!ALL of the orgasms to be the same. "...pleasure surged through me..." <---If I read that line one more time I was seriously going to put down my iPad and throw my Kindle.OR If you are desperate for a short quickie read, your world is coming to an end as you know it, AND this horrible excuse for entertainment/reading material is FREE.PLEASE DON'T READ IF YOU LIKE:To read things that are worth both your precious invaluable time and/or $money$.If you want to spend time reading something that takes more than a 2nd grade education to write.If you prefer to partake in sentence structure that isn't choppy and remedial (at best) but, something that shows some level of competence in the area of storytelling.There was only ONE redeeming quality and that was the author didn't try to make Bill (step-dad) a sure fire sex god. And she only did that minimally by giving him thinning hair. Everything else about him was attractive. (Lean muscles, sensitive brown eyes, looks good for 50, students have crush on him <----those are the author's own words by the way.)I deleted this mess as soon as I was done. Thankfully it only took about 5 minutes to read but, I couldn't dare allow trash to take up precious limited space on my kindle. I just don't understand authors these days. I wouldn't be able to allow myself to produce this type of product and expect people to pay. I hope it stays free.To the Author:Perhaps you should go back to the fundamentals of writing.