Review: Decent story
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 24, 2013
I'm torn over this one. The dialogue was amateurish (people don't call each other by name that often in normal conversation) and I thought the story could have used a better editor. There were a few character contradictions, too. For example, Diego says nothing matters but getting his wife over the border, yet he keeps standing up for other characters and putting his main objective in jeopardy. If there were more inner dialogue on his part about being compelled to do the right thing, it would have worked better.In the end, it was a good story that I kind of wished was part of a larger plot. Take away the fact that it takes place in the future, and it's just a regular crossing the border story that could apply to someone from Mexico crossing into the US. However, I did care a lot about the characters at the end and, coupled with the bittersweet ending, this was worth the read.