Review: Excellent plot but horrible execution
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 9, 2013
I hate that I have to give this book 2 stars. The plot and research is wonderful. In fact, that part is so strong that I continued reading despite how annoyingly distracting the editing (or lack thereof) was. It was literally a page turner, and for that I thank the author.However, it also read like a first book, and I don't mean that in a good way. I guess rather than "first book" I should say "first manuscript," because it's riddled with really amateur mistakes such as headhopping, tense switches, point of view problems (sometimes it's 3rd person, sometimes it's omniscient), grammar problems, typos, cliches, and above all, the pacing is terrible. The suspense/thriller action doesn't begin until about 75% through.In short, this book needs a thorough rewrite, a content edit, copy edit, and proofing, none of which it appears to have gotten, which is a shame because it's clear that the author can write. She has a wonderful imagination and did an excellent job in plotting and researching. Just judged on the plot alone, I'd say this is on par with the Da Vinci Code, but the writing itself is atrocious (and I can accept bad writing if I'm swept up in the plot -- see: Dan Brown).