Review: over priced ok read ...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 20, 2014
Well, the author couldn't keep the character's name straight she swapped between Sabrina and shelby often. It seemed as though this is one of those authors that refused to use contractions instead of can't she has can not, I am NOT and so on it kinda ruins the flow of a story when you're writing an American character. Never underestimate the use of a contraction . Also, she had gratuitous use of an Exclamation point, It got ridiculous it was almost as if the male character was shouting all the time. It took me 40 minutes to read the whole thing. This story ended with a "To be continued...".. This story is more suited for literotica or valentchamber, not something you need to pay for. I'm not saying I didn't like it, that would be a lie. I wanna see where this story goes but it needs A WHOLE LOT of fine tuning. A little bit of a ripoff.