Review: There's a reason I don't read fanfic
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 23, 2013
And this story is a great example of it.  Don't get me wrong, the writing itself isn't bad--a bit wordy at points, author needs to learn to let the dialogue speak a bit more for itself, let people's actions flow naturally instead of being forced to fit the story--and I'd have given it three stars if it hadn't been set in the world of Wool.  As is, I'm tempted to give it one star...not because I hated the story itself, but because it mangles what the original author has done.There are many inconsistencies within Davies' story in relation to the world Hugh Howey created.  In Hugh's work, the Silos are large enough that it can take days to go from bottom to top and vice versa...yet the two main characters are bopping around between levels like they have access to an express elevator.  The fact that they were apparently sending lots of emails runs counter to Hugh's world as does the head of IT in this story trying to convince Ace to change his mind about building better suits and going outside...in Hugh's world, simply expressing the desire to go outside gets you a one way ticket to the great outdoors.I suppose you could dismiss these inconsistencies (and there are many more) by saying that things are different in this particular silo.  But that's doing a disservice to Hugh's creation--the glaring differences in basic structure couldn't be allowed to happen if IT is in charge and running things according to the Pact.  And we have no reason to believe that they're not.