Review: Nice start
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 28, 2013
This book wasn't horrible nor would I advise anyone from not reading it. It was a short story that had a strong story but also had some weak points.I bought it because of the bad reviews because nothing can really be that bad, right?So here it is my review.Nice first effort for any author. Good world building with a hint of culture. It should have been fleshed out more. I think this book with a little more work a few revisions could have really been something great. There is definitely some real potential in this story and future for this author. This story was published a little early in my opinion. This is more like a 3rd draft.Darlik had a Bipolar personality. One minute hot and horny the next scary controlling wife beater;pulling her hair,pulling her up against him. That needed to be toned down a bit. I see an Alpha male that wants to come out but he's not quite developed yet. Our Heroine is in the same boat.She tells him No then submits to him when he yanks on her. Oh for the record if you ever ever use the term...Hubba Hubba automatically you loose your soul and at least 1 star!Sex scenes were rushed. Author started out good. Right on track then ended in one sentence. This is an acquired skill that will take time to develop. Inexperience will show here.Would I read again- No but I enjoyed it the first time.Would I buy another from this author- YesPrice- .99 cents Not a problem for a beginning author  Your second book I'm sure will be much improvedNo I don't know author