Review: Good Message, But Even Though the Last Word Rhymes, Some Sentences Don't Because Too Long
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 16, 2012
Obviously an amateurly done self published picture book.  Henry Burp has a great lesson for kids to learn about how other people will treat you if you do rude or anti social things, plus how if you make an effort to change your manners this will turn around.  It tries to tell Henry's tale in an inconsistent rhyming style.  This doesn't really work and highlights the fact this didn't have an editor involved.  For example some of the sentences which are supposed to rhyme yes use the last words that rhyme but because they are inconsistent in length and many have too many words, they don't actually end up rhyming if read out loud.  Such as the opening page -"Henry Burp was an average kid who enjoyed the usual things,like baseball and trucks and building forts and, of course swinging on swingsIf an editor or friend had pointed out it still would have told the same message but flowed and rhymed better with simply like baseball, trucks and swinging on swings, deleting all the words in between then the overall book would have been a much smoother read.The illustrations are very basic, but I don't think kids mind that.