Review: Great idea, so-so execution
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 22, 2014
This is the sort of story that has you immediately flip to the beginning to reread because you want to experience it again once you get the ending (and it's short enough that you can do this).  I thought the idea was excellent and there were parts of the story that were really moving.  However, the execution was uneven.  It could really do with a through edit and a close look at some of the phrasing/language choices.As of this review, the story is still free, so I recommend checking it out on that basis.