Review: good storyline but....
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 11 25, 2012
I liked the actual story and basic characters.  It is the writing style that really bothered me. It is choppy and lacks "flow"....partly due to the very short phrase/sentence structure of almost all the sentences and partly with the authors need to describe every article of clothing that every character wears with a brand name, style name and description. Its like reading a catalog, not a book....feels more like reading a list of "look how much I can tell you I know about high fashion pieces". Descriptions of the food in the restaurant scenes are the same only with food. It could do with more character devleopment as well. All in all this is a good first draft...but should not have been the "finished product".