Review: Should Have Been a Novel?
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 13, 2013
The concept is good, but I'm not so sure about the execution. It doesn't quite work as a novella. Perhaps if it was expanded into a novel.Also I'm not sure about the multiple points-of-view, especially when the catalyst for changing from one to the next is the death of the "viewer". Generally this mechanism only works if POV rotates regularly or if each view gets equal time.In novel form there might have been the opportunity to build Jenna into a more believable heroine as well. As it is, she seems somewhat flat, and the reasons for her being cast into this role are weak. She lacks credibility as a leader and her motivation is unclear. Even in this shorter form it should be possible to build a better backstory that informs Jenna sufficiently to make her a credible leader of this revolution.Finally, as other reviewers have noted, there's a fair bit of wordiness and repetition in the writing. A good editor (or even better "beta" readers) could have helped sort this out - and quite possibly fixed a few of the other issues noted above.All in all, a good effort from a first time author. I look forward to more polished work in the future.