Review: Has potential but needs work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 28, 2013
This short novella started off nice, if not unique, and then became a telling of the day-to-day life of Maude and her new husband, which caused me to start skimming pages. Nothing much happened to hold my interest. Maude seemed too naive to me, even for the time period, and the love scenes seemed a bit juvenile and weren't needed. The author also head-hops between the characters' point of views within paragraphs, which takes you out of the story. If the author would re-work this story by adding more depth, more plot and tension, and learn what head hopping is and correct that, then it would be a better story all around.