Review: this story was so confusing...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 4, 2014
It gave me a horrendous headache. The story was all over the place, some of the characters weren't needed, I didn't see their purpose for being there. The story had potential but the writer seemed to have gotten confused or couldn't put the words together. I also was irked by the "slang" the slang was confusing, and I'm very hood. I had to keep reading paragraphs over & over again because I couldn't decipher what was being said/written. There were a few grammar issues as well as spelling issues. I would read part 2 only because I've invested in part 1. This story didn't really appeal to me because of the characters/and or their actions. I didn't care for the dick (Erie's scumbag husband, what type of man would throw his wife  under the bus whom he claimed to love ? When the robbers ask'd for the combo to the safe the wimp completely showed me as a reader exactly what he thought of his wife, a real man wouldn't of told men with guns looking to inflict pain that his wife got the safe combo let alone call his wife home & drag her into danger. I love palace for making his life miserable I hope she keeps up the good work, hopefully he'll blow his brains out.