Review: Good story, but....
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 6, 2013
Sorry, I don't understand why a book that has such stilted writing can get a 5 star review.I like the story. But there are too many detailed explanations that really didn't do anything for the story.The writing style just doesn't flow. I'ts painfully slow and a little stilted.And the grammar errors make some parts very hard to read, and some sentences just make no sense at all.Here is one:We each step up on to a seg-a-ways you leaned forward it went forward lean what ever direction you wanted to go and they went that way, you leaned back to stop all while hovering about 3 inches off the ground. In larger buildings if you needed to get anywhere quickly you sometimes needed alternative modes of transport other than your feet!Locations 308-311The way this book is written made me decide on 3 stars only.With a good editor, this story could have been developed so much better.Sorely missing also is a good proofreader to catch grammar, spelling and syntax errors:....and then laughed at them instead of just considering for a few minutes that they, might of been on, to something.Location 730A perfect example of hiding in plane(?) sight.Locations 906-909The office's(?) they had for us.....Location 984All in all, an interesting topic, and a good story - but the end is a little too abrupt.What really happened to Seamus?