Review: Ridiculous story; could be good with a rewrite
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 4, 2013
SpoilersThe only reason this is a 2 and not a 1 star review is the basic premise is interesting, but the plot development was really, really bad. Some savvy rewriting and a good editor could make it a great book.I am perfectly willing to suspend disbelief when reading, but much of the plot was ludicrous. First, an executive is going to pluck a temp from the office pool and send her to negotiate a huge deal overseas? Please. Distant, cold CEO, ok, but at least give the heroine some professional background that makes Alexander's choosing her remotely logical. Samantha's own words sum up the biggest problem with the book "I had gone from a temp office worker to a woman who brokered international deals with multi-billion dollar companies." After just a few days?? Ugh.Samantha was an idiot (I would prefer to say 'twit' but another reviewer already used that one), and I half way hoped the kidnappers would kill her.  She let herself be dragged rather than walking while her hands were tied, but apparently wasn't hurt after being dragged on concrete with no shoes? Her struggles when her hands were tied and her tossing the chair at the glass made no sense and were moronic.The were too many over the top descriptions. Judicious use of superlative descriptions is fine to really emphasize something, but too many of them make everything sound ridiculous. One small sample: it's not just a meal, it's "...put a plate of food before me that smelled so delicious it totally voided any thought. The spices drifted up my nose with such a tantalizing smell that my mouth watered so powerfully it almost hurt. [ ] The first bite practically exploded in my mouth like a neutron bomb to my taste buds."Another helpful rewrite would be to remove 90% of the places "defiantly" is used, and a good editor would correct all the misuse of "I" vs. "me."