Review: Simply not beleivable
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 2, 2011
Although the story line is not bad, this author continuously had Native Americans who could barely speak English, thinking in complex English words and phrases...I highlighted a few in my kindle as examples...but one which really sticks out is when when of the native americans was thinking she was feeling queasy...simply not believable that someone who can barely speak English would think using the word queasy...I found myself thinking of how the thoughts could have been expressed in simpler English that you would have beleived the characters were thinking (rather than being caught up in the story)...this is throughout the book and really takes away from your enjoyment...It is clear from the preface that the writer was not going for any authenticity as she has the ceremony described as taking place years after the last ceremony was really performed (when all it would have taken was for her to change the date on the first page of when this happened--the date did not affect the story at all)....clearly this writer did not care for the book to sound authentic...but having the Native Americans "think" (and sometimes speak) in perfect and complex English was annoying and took away from the story...Here is one such time copied verbatim from the book...this is an Indian Girl thinking to herself during childbirth...but at this point this girl barely speaks English"It was almost done.  One more push and this process would be over!"  Process?another"You need focus on rabbit"  this from an Indian who just knew enough English to trade with the white man...Focus? surely not a word someone who barely speaks English would uselater on the Chief says"We suggest you leave"  Again, just not believable...There were many many more examples...but it was only 3/4 (or more) of the way through the book it ticked me off enough to decide to write a review...so I saved a couple of examples that were short...This book was mildly entertaining, and did have a few unexpected twists, but the language she had the Native Americans who could barely speak English using was simply unforgivable and is really distracting as you are constantly thinking "An Indian would not have said or thought that"I suggest this writer put a little more imagination into her writing, especially if she is going to do more books about Native Americans...simply not believable and ruins the whole book.