Review: Its OK could be great w a EDITOR !!!!
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 14, 2011
Good idea a little predictable a few surprises. Decent world building and mostly believable. My problem was editing EDITORS all you new authors PLEASE. Ok so when in one page we swap from 3 different women's perspective with no visual or written clue character perspective changed it is confusing and detracts from the story. Also one woman has 3 diff names and it is never explained why or presented, so was confused who the 5th woman was until I figured out that Laura Loi and loi-somethign all same freaking character, that is just sloppy writing. A nickname is Ok but make it where people can follow. That being said I read it all without skimming so that is good the details and descriptions were not overly burdensome it shows real potential and could've got 4 start with a good editor. Also trying to put 4 love stories into one little book kinda felt off not entirely but should have stuck to one woman's perspective and had others relay the beginnings of their stories in conversation and picked them up in other books.