Review: Good story but...
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 06 7, 2014
This is a good story but it really needs editing.  The reality and characters she created have great potential.  The magic sounds like computer talk - which could get really cool later.  My biggest complaint is the stubbornness of the main characters.  They absolutely refuse to communicate meaningfully.  That frustrates me because if makes the story feel artificially dragged out.  Also, if the rune breaker is so powerful, why does he have to mess things up and let everybody get hurt before he steps up to the plate.  It could just be that communication thing, again.