Review: Good plot, awkward prose
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 30, 2014
The plot is good, but the writing is awkward - ignoring the misspellings (of which there are many), a lot of it is written like a thesis paper or official document, rather than a story.  The dialog, for example, is not how English-speaking humans would talk to each other, but more like prepared speeches or lectures.  And the writing is a lot more of the "explaining" style of information rather than "storytelling" style of information; this is a common problem with new writers so I'm used to it.  Unfortunately it's also highly repetitive, explaining the same things again... sometimes only a page or two after they had already been explained.  All told, however, it was good enough for me to finish and buy the second book, though I'm not sure I can finish the second book: the same problems are in that book and I'm finding it a struggle to finish.