Review: Clumsy writing and I don't think I can finish it
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 24, 2014
I don't understand how so many people can like this book.  It is in need of major editing.  Reading it is painful.  For example, ""They're good people," Mase spoke in agreement.  Spoke?  How about said, replied, commented, nodded...active voice in the dialogue.  Or simply, "They're good people",  agreed Mase.I am not an English major but I am a technical writer and this book is in need of major editing to eliminate repetition, unnecessary or droning explanations, and the clumsy use of words and phrases.  More conciseness and less droning description would make for a more suspenseful story.But first the science has to be improved and the reality of the situation has to be better presented.  At one point, Mase, a main character can't understand why he has been called back to earth after informing the President that a neutron star that could potentially destroy the earth is headed directly for the planet.  In actuality, the character probably understood why but the writing is so poor and convoluted that it doesn't come through to the reader.  And if a neutron star could destroy the earth the moon won't survive either.The writing is diverting me to the point that I don't think that I will be able to finish the story.  And the story is so slow moving because of the clumsy writing that I think I will just put it down.