Review: Tolerable if you don't expect your characters to be capable of logic or rational thought.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 27, 2014
The good: I finished it. Most of the words were spelled correctly. With an editor and several revisions, it could be a pretty decent novel. It was free.The bad: Even suspending all concepts of reality, the author expects us to believe that Mars shrugged off assault, threats, breaking and entering, vandalism, and burglary with no desire whatsoever to contact the police. Why have a natural response to crime when one can trust a male stripper met 2 days prior? I mean, why would we NOT trust him? Surely a refusal to give his name isn't a sign of deception, right? Nah, he's cool because he sets the loins a-flame. Let's wait until a drive-by shooting in the workplace to contact the police...then have a brief exam by paramedics before leaving the scene without so much as a word to the police. Has this author bothered to research even the most basic actions taken in a police investigation?The final straw was when Mars realizes her stalker is a serial killer, but she ca't be bothered with that right now because she has a wedding to plan. If your characters aren't concerned about their lives, why should the reader?To the author: Please, please, please hire an editor. If you can't, then find new friends because the ones that read this and said "YES! Perfect! Publish it!" are dirty liars. You had a good start with interesting characters, but you lost it with the grammar, spelling (she's supposed to shudder, not shutter), and continuity errors.