Review: Too many grammar mistakes.  Plot development needed.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 20, 2014
Where do I begin? The premise was interesting a guy, Malcolm falls for a girl, Danielle A.K.A. 'Red." They first meet in high school at a rich private school. She doesn't return his affections. He spends 12 years trying to prove his love through cards, flowers and sweet notes.  Danielle marries Jon, but they are not compatible. Jon acts distant in their marriage, and leaves for a long period of time. Therefore Danielle leaves him with their young son. The story indicates that Danielle loves the concept of marriage. She thinks she's getting old so she married Jon in her early twenties.Danielle befriends Lola, who happens to be married to Malcolm's brother Caeden.  Caieden is a cheat and slept with Malcolm's ex-fiancé, Laura, who is Lola's sister.  Hopefully you're still following this??? It was hard for me at one point.Malcolm seizes the opportunity and he snatches up Red or Danielle as he calls her. Malcolm is rich like Red and a member of high society as well. He is known as a 'fixer.'Jon doesn't like it and taps into her phone remotely and stalks her.  Jon believes he still loves Danielle and tries to win her back but she loves Malcolm.In the meantime several things happen to throw her off. Malcolm and Red know that someone is stalking her and believe it's someone close to them or their friends.The story goes on with weird incidents that keep occurring to Danielle. Then we are thrown a cliffhanger on who the actual stalker is and the outcome.  Then the book sort of just ends.Here's my take. The author wrote the book from a first person point of view. That's popular right now. And that's fine; however, the story lacked detail. The love scenes for one. They were quick and not very vivid to me.Additionally the grammar is not very good.  The author needs an editor. I think that with some editing and plot development this one would have been better.Pros:Malcolm is likable.Danielle is likable.The affectionate side of Malcolm was endearing. That's what made this a 3.Cons:How is it possible for two people (Malcolm and Red) to have been in the same place at the same time so often and then go long spells without seeing each other. Not developed very well.Jon's character was all over the place. He wants a divorce then he doesn't. He leaves their home for months then suddenly returns.Grammar!!!!!!!! The author needs an editor or beta reader pronto. Why submit less than acceptable quality. Missing words, wrong tense and other issues here.The cliffhanger wasn't well written.This book should have been the rough draft. I'm being honest. And then the author should have come back stronger.