Review: Liked it despite some flaws
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 01 25, 2013
Cute story about 22 year old Addeline who gives away her V-Card to a stranger (Jordan) she meets in a bar, only to find that stranger is a partner in the architectural design firm where she has just begun her VERY IMPORTANT internship.I liked the characters a lot although, I thought the way they met was a little too fast. I would have liked a BIT more lead in to their bar encounter. And, although I understand their first meeting was supposed to be JUST SEX, I found him a little crude. He could have been just as detached without throwing the F-word in there right from the get-go. I don't know. I'm not anti-dirty talk and I, personally, tend to curse up a storm but this would have been a turn off for me. But maybe that's what made Addeline go for it, as, according to her, she was usually too focused on her studies to have any interest in men and maybe needed this kind of shock to go against her usual M.O.There are a lot of sex scenes (A LOT!) and they're pretty well-written (though someone who's SO focused on her studies that she rarely dates and yet, knows how to give a killer BJ well, that's beyond me). However, I thought there could have been more scenes in the story of them interacting outside the "bedroom" (I put "bedroom" in quotation marks because they have sex everywhere. I mean EVERYWHERE lol--still don't believe the rain scene!). Perhaps there could have been near misses where someone they know almost sees them together or does catch them and blackmails her...? I don't know, SOMETHING.I also would have liked to have seen more of Addy's friend, Kelli, who seemed like a fun, strong character. She was a good counterpoint to Addeline who appeared to be perpetually nervous--so much so, it began to annoy me. Don't you EVER get used to the guy you've had sex with 80 times?? For a talented, highly intelligent person, Addeline had a lot of insecurities. I would have liked her to be stronger--at least in her work. It would have been nice if she could really stand up for her designs and have the confidence in her abilities she showed before the internship, continue during the internship. Seemed like this kind of person would have...it was a false moment for me in the story. I expected her to be cockier about her talent even if she wasn't in her personal life.Anyway, supposedly her internship was a whole semester but it seemed much faster and long periods of time were flashed by with a sentence or two. So there could have been some more fleshing out of the story, in my opinion.Also, I feel like I was cheated in the epilogue. I hate it when an epilogue is just a repeat of something that already happens or, in this case, is too short to really add to the story. But that's just my hang up.The upshot is: cute story, hot guy, good characters but would have liked to have seen more.