Review: Good story line.
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 10 6, 2012
**** June 20, 2013***************** Updated review ********************I saw that the story had been re-edited so I reread the story. The editing is not  perfect but it has improved leaps and bounds from the version I read. For this I'm really glad.While I still appreciate the characters, I will say that it reads like a YA story, except for the vividly described sex scene. The plot held my attention the second time through and I bought the second book.I think that this book provides a new take on vampires and a fresh perspective on their origins. I would recommend this book to people who enjoy vampire stories.*********************************************************************************I liked the characters in this book and the plot was interesting enough to hold my attention. Another reviewer said that the pace was inconsistent, and though I agree with that, it wasn't enough to annoy me.What did annoy me, however, were the spelling, grammar, and punctuation mistakes. I think that if you are motivated enough to write and publish a book, you should be motivated enough to make sure it is properly edited.Paragraphs with only one period at the end, the misuse of there, their, and they're, here and hear, your and you're, and writing there for instead of therefore really took away some of the enjoyment of the story for me.As a reader, I feel disrespected when the author cannot take the time for simple editing. If I'm paying money for your book, I feel like a good story and good editing should be part of the unspoken agreement between the author and the reader.Even though I like the series and would love to know what happens to the characters, I will not be paying 3 to 4 hard-earned dollars for future books in this series. Let me know when you get an editor.