Review: Good story, needs editing
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 07 18, 2013
A well-thought out storyline, with good character development and a lot of action. My problem with the book is the author's writing style is so stilted that if the story had not been so enjoyable I would have had to give up. Here is an example:"Dirt and grease streaked their clothing and faces. Both drew their pistols. They sneaked over to the freight door. Amber peaked inside. She motioned for Troy to follow her. They sneaked inside."It reminds me of my first grade reading primers. See Dick and Jane. Dick and Jane are playing. Spot wants to play. See Spot play. The writing should flow and move from one moment to the next without feeling as if you are in a car with someone who is just learning to drive a straight shift and the ride is jerky with multiple stops and starts. Luckily, the action and the plot line kept me involved enough that I found myself reading the way I would have wanted it to be written. That made it easier to get through the stilted portions. Bottom line-it's a great story and could benefit greatly from the help of a good editor.And in case you missed a synopsis of the story, a sniper takes a shot at the President of the US and manages to kill the First Lady instead. A joint agency task force is put together to investigate the attempted assassination. There is all kind of evidence pointing to a particular suspect, but Troy Barclay of the AFT just isn't buying it. It's too perfect and nobody would be dumb enough to leave evidence lying around the way the suspect supposedly has. Bucking his superiors on the task force but with the support of his Lt at ATF, he begins his own investigation with the help of another ousted member of the task force, Amber Nielson with the FBI. Action comes fast & furious after that!