Review: The author's incorrect premise comes from a lack of basic homework
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 25, 2013
If I could give this work of fiction zero stars, I would.  Not only was it badly done, but it is chock full of false information.  The next time the author writes a book I would suggest performing some basic research.  At minimum, do a google search.Antibiotics cause immune deficiencies declares the author at the opening of the story, and this caused many people to die.  Holy buckets, the author got this WRONG.  Antibiotic use can mask an immune deficiency.  Overuse or incorrect use of antibiotics can render the antibiotic useless against that bacteria.  Antibiotics can aid your immune system in fighting a disease when used and prescribed correctly.  People with immune deficiencies are given antibiotics almost daily or daily (see AIDS cocktails).Extra chromosomal DNA in humans does not create a super power.  This is not an extra chromosome.  This is a process where chromosomes are removed from the nucleus.  The author stated that our little heroine had extra chromosomal DNA, and this indicated she was a leader.  Actually, humans do get extra chromosomal DNA.  Increased amounts indicate disease and cancer.  It is not desirable.  The author never actually mentions this again; except it was the given as the reason for Neklema to be appointed leader.  With all the ecDNA, she will be dead soon.Watching an episode of NCIS would have helped with the next DUH scientific moment.  At 84%, Beaufort is tasked with extracting????? DNA.  He says, "Well, I guess we ought to get going on extracting your GENETIC MATERIAL, DNA, blood and possibly your bone marrow."  First, DNA is genetic material.  DUH!  He extracts it by putting her to sleep because it is painful and takes a long time for the extraction to take place, according to the author.  DUH, WRONG!  A tube of blood taken with a syringe is sufficient.  Then you perform an analysis on the blood.  And I really hope they have a super process, because a DNA work-up, which is complete, currently takes a really, really long time.  (Look up human genome project).Immunity is not just a genetically acquired response system, but it is earned and learned.  While in the womb, a fetus acquires part of the immune capabilities from the mother.  Additional immune capabilities (chemicals) are acquired by drinking the milk from its mother.  In this book, the babies are removed from their parents.  They would want these mothers with the babies as long as possible in an effort to supplement their immune systems.  The action is not plausible based upon what we KNOW.Every exposure to people and things increases the capabilities of our immune response.  As I previously stated, your immunity is learned and earned through a lifetime of exposures.  The Eugenics colony is dedicated to increasing the capabilities of the immune response of each individual.  This will not occur if there is no contact between people, and they are kept in a sterile bubble.The author said everyone lost their immunity all at the same time because of antibiotics.  What in the heck?  This is not even POSSIBLE.  It wasn't even a sudden disease that blocked the ability of the body to respond.  Maybe a foreign protein could do this, but antibiotics...and it occurred to everyone at the same time.  The antibiotics are attacking, run for the sterile bubbles. *doubled over in laughter*.By the way, just because this is fiction doesn't mean you get to change scientific FACTS.  Authors are NOT allowed to say, listen, I can change facts because this is fiction.  F I C T I O N.  I don't have to KNOW NOTHING about what I'm writing cause it is fiction.  Yes, you can make up zombies, no you can't change the facts of life unless you are writing alternative world fiction.  Like a fact that can't be changed is that it is gravity that hold things to the earth or how gravity works.Now for the writing, it was stiff, wooden and boring.  It was prone to being over explanatory.  The word "doors" was used 174 times.  At 19%, you will find the following:1.  "After I put on the clothes that Kim had given me, I walked out the door that Kim had indicated that she would be waiting by.  The door wasn't heavy and swung open easily."  Readers, this had nada to do with the story.  This had zero import on the story.2.  "I was getting ready to ask Kim that question when we reached a crossroads in the hallway and Kim tugged me to turn left and began rattling."  Readers, is Kim an android or wear lots of metal?  No.  In the next paragraph Kim had a long-winded and boring speech.  This was just another filler sentence with enough boring detail to cause narcosis.3.  "We reached a set of double doors that were on my right, the first set of double doors I'd seen, and Kim turned and she pushed open the door on the left, I followed and pushed open the door on the right, how else was I going to get through the doorway?  Beyond the door was a large room."  (Where the author explained in minute detail the size, shapes, and arrangement of the tables for no apparent reason other then to test my ability to stay the frick awake.)  Most of the carp in the book read this way.The characters were boring, and often the author forgot what she had already said about her characters.  Why should she keep track of what she was writing, since it was all bad.  At 28%, we learned Neklema's parents had hidden information in her brain.  At 38%, her parents stated they had hidden information in her brain.  At 44%, we learn there was information somehow hidden in her brain.  At 62%, it was learned that grandpa had hidden the information.  Hmmm, this book was already bad enough.  At the very beginning, Kim tells Neklema when she first meets her that her parents are actually Kim's parents.  When Neklema escapes to Lambda with Kim, Kim for the FIRST time explains that her parents were actually Neklema's parents.  Supposedly, Kim had only previously hinted at this relationship explains the author.  IT WAS A PRETTY STRONG HINT.Then on top of this I was confounded by more nonsense.  Lambda and the Eugenics compounds started at the same time, but the Topians created Lambda.  It is explained to us that they can't easily get into eugenics because of the lack of the socializer implants.  The Topians, Kim, Neklema, Kim's real parents (who were the leaders of Lambda) and Neklema's real parents (who one of them was the child of Grandpa Topian)could not be in Eugenics because of a lack of an implant.  So how did Neklema's parents end up being Eugenicists who ran away from Eugenics to Lambda?  At least one of them started out in Lambda.  Then scratch your head and try to figure out how Neklema, who often played with Grandpa Topian, ended up being taken from her parents to Eugenics.  Melissa, Kim's mom, has always been with lambda, so how did Kim without an implant get into eugenics. (The author said all the Topians were always at Lambda).  The author needs to pay attention to what she is writing.And since the only evil the eugenicists are guilty of perpetrating is killing kids to see if their immune systems are strong enough, why not just give the immune system to them developed by gramps topian.  Their only evil would have stopped.Actually, I suggest this author never publish again. I would have returned this for a full refund, but I waited too long to read it.