Review: Good thing it was free!
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 2, 2013
This is really terrible, I cannot believe it was published.  It is a good thing that this story was free, or I'd be demanding my money back! It was very short (as stated in the description, so no surprise there) but also very poorly written.  Almost every sentence is a group of run on sentences or sentence fragments, which looks incredibly a lot like my grade-school daughter's homework.The premise of the story is good, it could be expanded on and turned into something good.Drac - if you are school age, great job, otherwise you should get a friend to proofread your work.