Review: Lacking
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 19, 2013
I will save time and echo the review of Lisa M. Hall "luvmytide".  Basically, drove me nuts how far off base the author was when writing about a college quarterback and getting almost nothing right about it. I realize this is fiction, but I she could have easily made this story fit with a more accurate portrayal of what college football is really like. Second, I just couldn't connect with Sedona (although love, love, love her name).  I didn't dislike her until the very end, when she really was just so self absorbed to not even think about how Zander should play into her future plans. The editing is not very good and I'm not sure she even read through the manuscript when she was finished.  For example, Zander mentions his "best friend, Kieran"...Kieran isn't his best friend; that was Sedona's.  I know a mistake like that isn't really hard to follow along, but things like that were frequent.  Lots of improper use of quotation marks or spaces in wrong spots, etc.  Again, just exhibited to me maybe too much of a haste to get this to publication without making sure it was completely polished.  One other thing that sort of stood out was I don't think the author is very hip to current pop culture, trends, slang.  One example that stands out was Zander mentioned how cute Sedona was in her white nurse's uniform. It brought to image those starched white uniforms w/ skirt and pointy collard shirts with starched hats.  No nurses where those in today's time.  They wear colorful scrubs mostly. The one good thing about the book was Zander. I thought he was a fantastic hero and I connected to him, and that's why I gave it two stars versus one.  If the editing and polishing were better, I'd boost it to 3 stars.