Review: disjointed
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 10 5, 2013
There is nothing wrong, in principle, in beginning a story in a light mood and letting it gradually become darker and more dramatic. Transitions must be fastidiously treated, though, and that is exactly what is not working here.While whole pages/scenes are neatly written and convincing if read by themselves they simply do not work if read in succession. Mood and characterization do not progress logically: they shift and not always consistently.The overall impression is that of a disjointed chain of events.Sex scenes are quite bad. The lovers seem always preoccupied by facts unrelated to their love making and depictions in general read like examples from a safer-sex handbook for gay teenagers.