Review: It IS a spanking story folks - clothed a little better but still the same at heart!
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 10, 2013
I did like it - not quite 4 stars worth though. I appreciated that the alpha guy remained alpha even while she was his wife. I really enjoyed the lizard in the beginning - I was hoping for more weird kinky stuff with him but alas this was very mild - just a bit of public exhibitionism and a little finger action. Sigh.Ellie was pretty bratty - which is not a trope I really like - so that brought it down a little. She was young so I did give her a break but even for being young she was quite obnoxious at times. It was hard to see her as any grown woman when she acted like a 12 year old - to her credit the author never shies away from that and there is acknowledgment that Ellie is really immature. I LOVED the elder Masterston - woo Daddy! Yes Sir!I did like how Ellie was herself even when acting immaturely - it was realistic and made a lot of sense.Things that I wished were improved include:Crafting the world in world building of which there was very little. I needed much more to get the picture of this SciFi world in my head. Lacking that it sort of looked like Nevada to me. Not sure if that was intended but that's how it felt. I had no experience of this world by sight, touch, smell, or sound. Adding small elements that addressed these senses would have created a rich vibrancy. As it were this was, well, dry. We needed more description and not only of body parts and size. Especially since Ellie's skills opened up a whole world of opportunity ripe for exploration but it is just not deep enough for the length of the book. A space ship is just a space ship. You don't really get any sense of size, construction, how it feels inside, what it sounds like, or even what sort of odor might permeate it's passageways and cabins.Stronger editing: Some strange word choices that pull you out of the writing because they don't really fit. Some sentences had 6 or 7 comma's which just didn't read or flow smoothly. The author has a talent for the story - that much is clear. The ideas area great and she creates interesting characters who touch you so this seems to me to be something workable. I get the impression the author is very young (too many WOW! and SWEET! expressions in the book) and I for one am encouraged because growing in this craft means we have some great stories to look forward too!