Review: The story line is good, once it becomes evident
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 04 22, 2014
Michael, you must get the difference between a 'clip' and a 'magazine' straight in your mind. The story line is good, once it becomes evident. Hiding details from the reader is not like hiding details from opposing parties in the story. Confuse the opponents--don't confuse the reader. Your descriptions are flowery, perhaps too flowery, flowery enough to lose what was going on. Just cut down on the descriptions and include more story line. Clips-magazines-not same. Peter Sowatskey