Review: Liked the story
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 25, 2013
The story was good and would have earned more stars if the characters were developed.  Instead of developing the characters, the author described the scene.  At times it came across as if a person were describing what was happening on a TV show. Lots of unrealized potential perhaps due to the short format.As a positive point, the story did not have gratuitous sex.  There was strong attraction but no bodice ripping. The author did get this right. When the reader is told Calvin admires, cares, and is attracted to Dorothy,he treats her with warm respect. This is at the same time he is kissing her witless. This consistency in of the actions following the author's description of why they are embracing is a positive.