Review: story line/premise was promising
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 12, 2013
I love the story line. REALLY, REALLY, did not like the constant prose of descriptive words. I got the feeling that the Author got out the Thesaurus and looked up a descriptive word then decided to just toss all of the words in at once. I have read Victorian sonnets with far less flowery wording.The first part of the book was a bit rushed but I can handle that, As soon as Haley gets to the ranch it is like another Author begins writing. The words ... ACK.. I am sorry for the scathing review. To the Author. My advice is to take your book. develop your characters, and take your time with them. Give me a story. Give me a story of love and yes sex. Get rid of the flowery descriptive wording and rewrite this story into a contemporary romance. You have a good premise, Go with it.