Review: Good Debut Novel
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 04 21, 2014
Complimentary copy provided by author/publisher for an honest reviewAlthough I thought this book had a great storyline and potential I felt there were some errors within the story that could have been smoother. The opening definitely had me excited but I think it got me too excited and I felt let down at first. Trying to get past some of my issues and connect with the characters was rough for me. It wasn't till about 47% into the book where I felt the writer got comfortable and really connected with the story. It flowed better and I was able to be sucked into the story and understand the characters more.One of the difficulties with me is sometimes it felt like I was reading off a list. Example:"He brought his lips back to hers in a slow, languid kiss. He rolled to the side, moving his weight off of her. He got up and stalked to the bathroom to dispose of the condom."In my mind this is what I saw:1. He brought his lips back to hers in a slow, languid kiss. CHECK2. He rolled to the side, moving his weight off of her. CHECK3. He got up and stalked to the bathroom to dispose of the condom. CHECKThere were many instances of this where I felt it could have been described better.And then there was the comments on the characters and their wives at the beginning when Emma meets them all at Smokey's, but then come to find out that Rob and Laurie aren't married nor engaged, confusion. There was also the over use of their names. When a scene only has two individuals in a bed playing "some hot and heavy tackle football", aka sex, you don't need to start a sentence with their names. He and she is really all that is needed for the reader to get what is happening; examples:"Jake pulled out, and Emma curled up next to him. Jake looked at the clock.""Emma reached up, pulling on his shirt until he could shrug it off. Jake and Emma continued to undress each other until they stood bare, no clothes, no fears, no inhibitions.Turning slowly , Emma walked the few step to the bed, where she lay down on her back, raising herarms up towards Jake."Being a debut novel I don't want to hold too much against it but do feel that in time a revisit to the story and touch up might be done to help it along when the author has had more experience. That being said, it had a great storyline, one hell of a twist, and I loved the suspense leading to the end!3.5 *WINK* READBook Flirts by Jessi