Review: Painfully lacking in a good edit
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 6, 2012
I bought both books at the same time (something I have to remember not to do again with an unknown author) because I love the genre, and it was a painful mistake. Now, I know that have a problem other overlook, with the sheer volume of books being published now using editors who don't really know the English language well (or at all), but this book appears to have completely missed the editing cycle.First, there were the basics--words left out, extra words left in, obvious spellcheck replacements that were just wrong (eluded for exuded, defiantly instead of definitely, etc.), the hero's last name was mis-spelled in a couple of places, and a number of other painful errors. Then there was the struggle with point of view and verb tenses. Any halfway competent editor should have been able to fix that in a single pass. Two reads at the most.Next, the writer had some difficulties keeping track of the details in her scenes--a particularly memorable point was where she had her hero hide his hands under the pillow because his claws came out and in the next sentence was tweaking her nipples with those clawed hands (owww!).  And an unfortunate tendency to tell the reader things instead of showing the reader and letting them decide.Beyond that, the story line is a re-tread of a genre standard that had holes you could drive a doublewide tractor-trailor through with plenty of room to spare. The scene transitions were choppy, the characters had little to no depth (the PhD-holding heroine seemed completely vacuous), there was almost no world building, it had a single plot line (scientist meets hot were and cannot adjust) that had no depth. There were a few minutes of semi-realism--for example, the guy tries to be nice and go slow, but when offered the opportunity for sex, takes it without thought to the consequences (such a very guy thing to do); then the girl has morning after jitters (also completely normal), but the author doesn't manage to hang on to that sense of reality for more than a few lines at a time. The worst part was that even the sex scenes weren't well done, so if you are just looking for a little soft porn, this isn't it.My suggestion is to hold off on this until it's been revised. A LOT. Or skip to the second book. It is also in painful need of a capable editor, but the characters have a bit more depth and so does the world. Not much, but enough to get 2 stars instead of one out of me.