Review: The Evil Review
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 23, 2013
This story has a lot of promise and so do the character's, but it just fell flat for me. It's obvious that the writer has talent, but her execution is poor and it needs help.So the main character, Gabe Cannon is part of team called XO-ST(Xtreme Ops-Shadow Teams) Yeah, that name screams trying TOO hard. The story opens up with him identifying the teams target: Jake Teckla who's wanted for murder.This is after Gabe himself notes how odd it was that he was the last in the building but the first on the room, enabeling him to lock unto the target before the rest if his team. C'mon. You can't make this anymore convienent for the character Dana Marton.So Gabe catches the traget, and figures out that it isn't Jake but his oldest of two sisters, Jasmine. Afterwards,the POV is switched to Jasmine ranting about how she always had a crush on him as a teen when he and Jake were friends. Gabe then allows her to esacpe, knowing the team will use her to draw Jake out. I mean that's sweet and all but c'mon! What kind of team is this; that has members that allow individuals to get away that can lead toward the target?The team then regroups, and Jasmine decides to take a quick trip to the place where her family is hiding to get them the essentials they need, along with medicine for Jake's infected leg wound. Jasmine, then decides to go back to Gabe(the "enemy" against her brother's orders) to get his help with Jake because he's been framed. The eye rolling has begun at this point.Gabe then decides to help, follows her to her hiding place and proceeds to interrogate Jake, after letting them know the team will be there in 40 minutes, and proceeds to fill buckets with water to fill a bath for the youngest sister Mandy who has a fever.But wait, what?! How does his team even know to follow him and find Jake, if they don't even suspect he's helping the target and Gabe has made sure he hasn't been followed. Suffice it to say, they escape without delay with a sick young child, a wounded and haggard AWOL soldier in 40 minutes. This scene is so unlikely, it's not even funny.Then you have the whole reason behind the "frame" job, which involved a greedy Brent Folly(the leader of XO-ST) wanting the gold found on a previous mission all for himself, therefore, killing the team members and framing it on Jake.And the love story. This story was so short and had so much going on, I'm suprised there was even a love story. A like story? Yeah, but a proclamation of love so early? No. Let's not forget the fact that the only team memeber that was remotely introduced was Troy, a man with scars on his face from an explosion that killed his wife.I just can't with this story, especially that part where Gabe finally realized he was being traced at the end when he saw the team was after them, and proceeded to throw the watch in the water. A little too late for that Gabe, a little bit too late. SMH lmfao