Review: Beautiful color, good lesson
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 06 9, 2014
Children will be attracted by the beautiful color illustrations, although the characters seem much the same in their emotional expressions. Also, some copy is hard to read because it is over the illustrations. A few misspelled words--"led" for "lead."A few imperfect rhymes: "big tree...hungry -- glee...happy. Also the rhythms are sometimes choppy. Little kids need a steady, repetitious rhyme pattern, as in Dr. Seuss' books. The sentences need to be shorter--they are too long at times. "Zappy only had one thing left in his sack, it was a Christmas cake he had bought for a snack." Try this: "Zappy had one goodie left in his sack--a fruity cake he bought for a snack." "Christmas cake" has three upbeats in a row--choppy rhythm.The font needs to be larger for children.Overall, though, it's a good story with illustrations. With a little more work, it would be near perfect.