Review: An okay erotic read
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 20, 2011
This story, around 557 kindle locations, isn't a bad read, but I think it could have been better. In the beginning, it's a bit slow in building up the sexual tension and need. As these two characters skirted around this almost adolescent liking of each other (she called him a 'perv' and shook her finger at him way too many times), I personally think that this flirting between them could have been smarter, making any chemistry far more sexy as well.Where this story did deliver for me was the only sex scene. While there was an earlier scene of masturbation with voyeurism/exhibitionism, it was this last scene that had all the real punch. Finally, there was some actual sexual tension and need, some real passion, with the sex having an almost out-of-control and wild feel to it. I just wish more of the story had had this type of feeling and eroticism threaded throughout.I think this story needs a little more passion, maybe making more of those earlier opportunities in the story to wind things up more, really building up the sexual tension. For erotic fiction, this isn't the best I've read, but it's also not the worst. For me personally, it's more an average read that had some potential that wasn't totally fulfilled.