Review: Desperately needs to be rewritten with an editor
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 27, 2014
This is a self-published kindle book about surviving and bugging out after an EMP. It is set in northern New Jersey, then moves to someplace like the Tug Hill Plateau or the western Adirondacks in upstate NY. It is the author's first novel, and I am sorry to say that it shows. The book has all the characteristics of an amateur, unedited novel: it is full of logical and grammatical errors, the dialogue is long-winded and unrealistic, as is the treatment of romantic relationships. The characters are poorly developed, which makes it confusing given that all the males have single syllable names that start with "J". A sampling of problems:- The main protagonist, a police officer, immediately abandons his post adopting an "every man for himself" attitude - sort of like some of the NOLA cops in Katrina. The cop even goes so far as to beat up a lawyer whose stalled vehicle is blocking traffic. Later on, he loots a Wal Mart. We are supposed to like this guy?- The word "inmate" does not need to capitalized every time it is used.- $3000 in cash will not buy an M&P; 9, a remington 870, a mossberg 500, a S&W; AR 15, and 3 Gen 2 night vision monoculars, even in the best of times, much less, when the S has HTF.- Cassidy is unconscious after the big firefight at the NJ cabin, but on the next page is participating in the discusion about bugging out.- In the middle of the book "James" wakes up in the hospital. Who the hell is James? I guess he's the unnamed guy in the pick-up leaving Fort Drum in the begining of the book who seems to have secret knowledge of the conspiracy, but that's not particularly clear.My advice: keep writing, keep working, get an editor or at least some friends who will offer honest criticism. The author shows some promise, but this book is not ready for prime time.