Review: Show, don't tell
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 19, 2014
I couldn't finish this story. It reads like it was written by a girl the same age--or younger--as the 21-year-old heroine. In its favor, grammatical errors don't litter the content. But the author hasn't mastered active voice and the concept of "show, not tell." Maturity and experience will help fulfill this author's potential.