Review: With a little work this can be a grand book
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 1, 2014
Little character development, some sentences made no sense because of words left out, spell check would have been something to be made use of...and the story was thin, but the author has the basics, and that could expanded on.  It ended awkwardly.There were some interesting secondary characters, but they never were developed.  The story is more like  summary and if the author went back and rewrote, something great could be made out of the ideas....Think of it as an outline, and take it and spend some time and re-work it and you will have a grand story, instead of a simple good story.  Strive for higher, and check your historical facts and weave more of them into your story, it will give you more depth, and make your book more memorable.Then there is the unbelievable part, the English invading the story and home land, that whole thing needs to be reworked....and it is very hard to believe that whole fight scene, although her I did like having the wee lass holding her dirk on the leader, however, it is not  believable that there was not more fighting, and I can not believe that the laird would not kill the villeins.  Her story is worth re-working but at this point, it is not worth what I paid for it, and unfortunately that was $0.00.  And the village men not having swords, knives, hoes and rakes????  They would have been fighting tooth and nail to save their wives and children.  Scots do not just sit down and take it!  Not even the women, and there should have been some teen boys there working with their dads and fighting for the children and women folk.  There is a a very good reason why Henry could not take over Scotland, and to this day they are strong willed and highly opinionated....says she who had a Scot father, and has that same blood in her own veins.Seriously, would any of us fall in love with a rapist?  I should hope not!  Rape should never be turned into a positive.  And how can be a good laird if his whore can make a travesty of his marraige.  She would have been banned or married off to some old geezer, (which would serve her right)faster than you can shake a finger at her.  Also i dont believe she would really have acted like that, maybe once before the laird read her the riot act, and telling here who he was going to marry her off to if she did not straighten up and treat his lady properly.I would like to encourage our author.  Yes, There have been some harsh criticisms but a budding author has to expect that....but never send off something you are not sure is completely correct, spelling, punctuation and editing...do they even teach editing anymore?  I don't know, being so old, but that doesn't mean I can't still read.  Please, author, do not give up, just make it better.  The exercise will make you a better author...and I truly hope we see more of your work!