Review: Too Short
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 9, 2014
Short stories like this tend to annoy me because they are written as serials that are supposed to entice you to individually buy the rest and at 99 each they are never worth it. I am glad this one was free because there was an insufficient build up and there was some very poor editing when it came to changing what character's internal dialogue we were getting; a new paragraph is not sufficient, you need a page break.There was one sex scene which was written quite well but then it was suddenly cut off. The cutoff didn't seem to be on purpose because it wasn't tantalizing just plain abrupt, all of a sudden she's dressed, out the door, and in the limo on her way home with only the notion that he wants to see her again. But this cliffhanger, if you can call it that, did not reel me in it just put me off.