Review: Great Premise ... But Underwritten
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 24, 2012
Description: When Dieter inadvertently rescues Deja from the Croatian mafia, he plans to make her his mistress, but his heart, soon has him demanding more from the beautiful woman than just sex.The Good: I really loved that the hero hailed from Germany. Ms. Azod did a wonderful job of building up to the sex, and she created really great villains with nice, specific details. The stakes are also well set. It is impossible for the reader not to want to see Deja truly rescued from the life that awaits her.The Bad: The great premise is hindered by a lack of character and story development. Dieter's characterization suffers from excessive interior dialogue. And Deja, in particular, is so underwritten that it's hard to get a good read on her.Almost every man she encounters instantly likes her and they're willing to go through extremes to protect her or get her back, but the author fails to present us with a character who would believably inspire such commitments. One can't just say that a character exudes light and innocence, she has to be shown doing so -- and though Deja's situation is lamentable, at no point does she come across as "light and innocent."The mother-daughter relationship is also way undercooked, which is a bit strange, since it ends up becoming a thing over the course of the story. In the end, this felt like a novella written too quickly and made up of instant connections, none of which were earned. Lastly, anyone who has ever been any kind of office assistant will hate the disrespectful way Dieter treats his own assistant.The Naughty: Steamy. Lots and lots of sexual tension.Editing issues: 6 typos found. Weird indentation. Clunky grammar in places.Publisher: IndieLength: 72 pagesFinal Grade: B-Happy Reading,Theodora from irbookreviews.com