Review: Incredibly immature and badly written
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 05 8, 2013
I felt like I was reading the FIRST DRAFT of a high school creative writing project.  Dean Jacobs and his 'buddies' Shaun and Jon talk crudely about women: "hitting that", "tapping that," and referring to Dean as "big baller" like immature high school jocks playing sexual one-upmanship.  The female protagonist, Evy is okay, but her sister Brooke, who I assume is the novel's comic relief is unspeakably crude.  It was painful to read her.Clunky phrasing ('his appetite getting wetter'), bizarre similes and metaphors  ('Evy's eyes roamed his rigid stature like wild horses,' and 'her eyes thinned'), along with some of the most amateurish descriptive writing that I've ever read ('Evy laughed sharply, her jaw dragging the floor.' and my absolute favorite: 'She massaged his groin, watering the erection inside.'), leave us with a novel suffering from incredibly bad editing.  The wretched editing, poor word choices, hackneyed plotting, and uninteresting characters are each, individually SO bad that I will not be buying the 'conclusion' to this tragedy in the form of a novel.Yes, ladies and gentlemen.  Ms. Cross has taken a bad story and stretched it across TWO books just to take more of your money.  Be warned: her next novels, The 'Just One Night Series', though better written and plotted stretch across THREE books.  If you are going to spend upwards of 5 to 6 dollars for an e-book, I suggest that series.  Don't waste your time or money on this one.