Review: Some Improvement Over The Last Book
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 18, 2014
This book has improved somewhat over the last one. Gone are most of the blatant in-your-face grammar errors and typos. There are however, still several. The formatting on the chapter subheads could use some work. The story line was good. It could have used some more overall character development. One thing it could have done without is all the sex scenes. This type of story doesn't require that. What ever happened to the slow build? You can generally tell as well that a male is writing these books under the pen name of a woman. Such things like the male "member" are a dead giveaway. I always ask myself, "Member of what? Congress?" If the overemphasized sex scenes were to be toned down and the characters were developed better, this could be a real winner.