Review: Too Wordy
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 24, 2014
This is a review I did not want to write as I don't like to complain.  Before reading the book I read most of the prior reviews both pro and con, so I was not surprised. The plot of a cross class marriage is a good one.  However the author spends to much time telling us what each of the characters is thinking.  I referrer to this as thought bubbles.  It is used to excess.  I found that I had to reread sections just to understand the dialouge. It slowed the story line and frustrated the reader. I found myself skimming pages before I was a third of the way in. The grammar and spelling errors were extensive. This book is in need of a good editor.  It could easily been cut by a third and still been a good story.I don't wish to spoil the story for another reader however there were at least two things that just did not make any sense.  If their mother died early in their lives who raised the two sisters?  They have no relatives but are presented and accepted with in the Ton? Why did sister Sophia show up at Jane's house prior to the wedding?  She all of a sudden appears spouting her nasty comments and then disappears.  This from a character who has not been seen, spoken to or contacted her sister in 6 weeks. Their were other instances like these that caused the characters to sometimes not make any sense.The author is talented and shows a lot of promise but would greatly benefit from some time with a editor.