Review: Good first work, Promising author
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 06 12, 2013
Most of the time I have to wade through, spelling problems, homonym issues, punctuation and formatting issues just to read the story.  It's like a dirty screen on your television.No dirty screen here.The next glaring and consistent problem is character consistency.  Does the author know his characters, or is he continuously ad-libbing, so the character does things that disconcert the reader?Here, no.  All is good.  Can't say I really thought well of the main character's internal dialog and not so occasional angst.  Been a junior Lieutenant.  The successful ones didn't have all that running around in their heads on the bridge, but, OK, his actions turned out as well as could be and the angst didn't really freeze him up.So, is the plot and the universe believable, detailed enough to work in and consistent?Pretty much.  A little light on the socio-political background, but enough to carry the plot.Was it enjoyable?  Oh, yeah!I'll get the next, and this author listens to readers, (Already put in my two cents, thanks.  Got a nice note back.) which (I hope) means he's going to keep improving.That's part of what we are doing here, fellow readers; watching and helping the growth of indie writers so we can say we knew, and helped, the next Heinlein or Smith or Asimov.So all together, 4 stars is a little high, but I was very impressed with the reality of the last battle. The duel, the mutual damage, the very awareness of what a battle between ships light-seconds apart would involve.Good job.