Review: OK, but
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 14, 2013
I enjoyed Lucky Charm and I think Ms Astor has definite promise as a novelist. There were some things which made me give it 3, instead of 4 stars. The writing seemed to be redundant in places. I think good editing would have tightened up the story line. Ms Astor seemed to have lost track of a character's name as well. She named her Athena Alexander in one place in the story (loc 3394), but in a couple of other places she's Athena Christy. I don't know how authors confuse their characters in this way or why their proofreaders don't catch that. I would think that using giant sheets of paper with all the names, relationships, attributes given a character would be pasted around the writing room walls to make sure names, characteristics, occupations, relationships/family would be consistent.In loc 2440 Etienne talks about "his new wife" and then later on he refers to her as his fiancee.  That kind of sloppiness should have been found in re-reads and by proofreaders, I think.  Etienne was a bust.  He didn't seem to have much personality.  I'd hoped to have Steven much more involved with Annabel.I hope Ms Astor continues to write but gives more time to consistency and tightening her plot lines.