Review: Author development needed
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 19, 2014
It's been two days since I finished this book and I'm still trying to figure out what to say about it. Good points: it kept me interested. I wanted to know what happened. The sex was mostly on point and hot. Bad points: lousy formatting, like no space between chapter heading and first sentence, and paragraph indents that went way too far into the text. Also, the author tended to wander around the focus, as if she either wasn't certain how to focus the narrative to get her story told, or thought she needed to add more words. Finally with the bad stuff, the story moves in jerks, often within the same page, with inconsistent characterization and conflicting motivations.I'd love to see this story after it is properly edited, and after the author takes more time to develop a coherent flow to the character development. I think Ms. Sinclair has promise, and I'd hate to see that promise lost in more works like this one.