Review: Didn't blow me away, but still entertaining
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 5, 2013
This story went from 4.5 stars in episode 1 to 3 stars in episode 2. What went wrong? This has become a soap opera. Well, a dark soap opera.I couldn't remember half of the names, and I'm not going to reread the first novella (I hate rereading unless it's a classic). If it's supposed to be structured like a season, I think it would make more sense to release a novella weekly (like TV episodes). Three weeks is just too long, and I know I will hop off this train soon. Maybe I'll read all the novellas when they've been published.The story continues with, again, dual pov, Jagger and Rita's. This episode is a little darker than the previous one, but characterisation is off. Rita suddenly wants to 'save' Jagger, and I'm sitting here thinking, regardless of his past, he's still an ass, a human trafficking ass.Why does Rita suddenly want to salvage his soul? It makes no sense for her character at this point; there has been too little development in their relationship. That disappointed me. Rita came across a bit ditsy in this book, which is not fitting the characterisation of an undercover FBI agent. Jagger is a bit whiny most of the time.To me, the main characters in this episode seemed to be Frano and Rita, therefore I would've loved Frano's pov. I kind of like Frano a lot more than Jagger now.Everything went too fast, too many revelations that felt like I was reading a soap opera.But the story is entertainingly twisted. I do have a weak spot for men of the clergy, especially twisted priests.If you like dark and disturbing mafia stories with M/M, you should give this a try. The premise is actually quite good, but I think the storyline would be better executed in full length novels. The author uses a little too many mafia tropes for my taste. And the cliffhanger is annoying, it stops in the middle of a scene.The story needs a little more editing; I came across a few typos and editing errors.