Review: dialogue kills it
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 18, 2014
I really enjoyed the premise, and the author has talent, but the writing is very stilted. The descriptions were fine, but dialogue felt very forced and unnatural. I couldn't get into the story with how awkward it read. Exposition of plot elements is a risky move, and this author relies on it. As it is, I cannot recommend the book. It reads very amateur, poor quality even for fan fiction. That being said, I think she has promise, and with practice, could improve. One of my professors gave me some advice for dialogue, to read all dialogue out loud. It makes it easier to find what is ruining dialogue, and make it more realistic. I will check out her future work, but recommend avoiding this book. It is not worth the cost, unfortunately.