Review: Cute premise that went on too long...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 3, 2013
Again I have to write a less than stellar review and unfortunately, again, many of the issues would have been addressed and rectified in the EDITTING process. That said, here goes:- A period is required at the end of a sentence, even if the end of that sentence is dialogue and encased in quotation marks.- Very repetitive. He does, she doesn't. She does, he doesn't. What was probably supposed to be drama, when repeated over and over and over is not. The inability of the main characters to believe anything but the worst of each other leads the reader to conclude they are morons rather than successful adults.- Phrases joined together all over the place with commas and conjunctions when they should have been separate sentences.It's pretty basic: you can have the best story idea in the world, and you may even be able to write it, but if you don't get an EDITOR to tighten it up and correct the errors you can't or don't see, it ends up reading like a teenager of average intelligence wrote it for an English class.This review sounds snarkier than I intended, but I'm getting really tired of reading uneditted books (I think most of you have figured that out by now).