Review: Comma's, comma's and more comma's.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 29, 2013
I recently purchased this book specifically because I was going to be in Tombstone on Memorial Day weekend performing(we go there often since we live nearby). I thought it would be fun to read this, then look down the street and say "Ok yeah, that's where that building is"... yeah, that didn't happen. I'd like to know where the author did her research because it was pretty inaccurate. For one, there are very few abandoned buildings in town. Tombstone makes an effort to NOT have any because it drives down property value for the rest of the buildings. Number two, there are no caretakers of the town. They have a mayor, council members, etc just like any other town which brings me to the next point... Tombstone is not a ghost town. It was at one point but it is a thriving little community that serves over 450,000 tourists a year(which keeps the town in needed funds, clean, etc). The only building that resembles some of the descriptions of the town is the Birdcage Theater. When that was reopened it still had everything just as it was when it was boarded up years ago. It's now a museum and shows mostly original to the Birdcage items. (Go see it, it's awesome!)The dialogue really bothered me... The terms of endearments "cowboy" and "pretty lady" were used far too often. Many of the filler sentences were repeated, one sentence after another(but were reworded)and there were several punctuation, grammar and spelling mistakes. For example: the COMMA's. Why was there an abnormally bizarre amount of them? Page after page would have sentences that should have been three sentences and not one sentence with 6 comma's. After a while it started to sound like William Shatner was reading the story in my head. Please, please, please Ms Moon acquire an editor or get a new one(heck, I'll edit for you! I'd love to as your stories are quite interesting!)Onto the good... I really loved the story line. In fact, I've had a similar story line in my head and am glad someone put it to paper!! The premise is a great one and despite my problems with some of the things in it, I am looking forward to reading the last two. I can't wait to find out if it's a time travel romance... or is it going to be a reincarnation romance like Jude Deveraux sometimes writes?