Review: good effort, but no.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 10, 2013
I think I know what the author was trying to portray, but for me it missed the mark by too much. Although this doesn't factor into my rating, I object to the term trilogy. That implies three books. This was more like three dates between the same two people. Taken together they only added up to a very short novella.My first problem was with the writing. This needed a lot more polish. I think the author has potential but this work isn't ready yet. The writing was stilted. The main character frequently sounded like a young girl, not a grown woman. There were not a lot of typos but there were several places where the phrasing was awkward. It was only written from the POV of the woman but there were weird flashes of "thought" from the man that didn't fit.Then came the first "punishment scene" and that's where it all fell apart. It did not feel like a loving dom, punishing bad behaviour from his sub. It felt like a man getting his jollies by hurting a woman. Part of it was because there was a quantum leap between what had gone on before and this scene. Part of it was because of the way the h reacted. It sounded more like "this really hurts and I don't like it but it's what he wants so I'll put up with it, oh by the way, I think I'm turned on." The second punishment scene wasn't any better.The ending came out of nowhere. Like she drew a piece of paper out of a hat, that had one possible ending written on it and then she had to work that in, in the last chapter or two. Unfortunately, that was the only plot point in the whole story so two stars might be generous.