Review: fix it!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 15, 2013
This author needs someone to proof read and seriously edit their work. I really think this was written by a 5th grader. Nothing happens in this book. It goes nowhere and the dialogue is boring! It jumps from past to present tense, and there are so many unnecessary do's and does in there it's completely distracting to the reader. Things like- they do go into the store. They do light a campfire. It does start to get dark....This is just examples of what you read. I'm sorry for slamming any author, but please have someone who knows what they are doing read it for you first and maybe read it aloud before you publish. If you fix these things and spruce up the plot, it would probably be a good novella.