Review: So-so erotica
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 21, 2014
"One Night of Sin" is an erotic short that features Lisette, a librarian, and Sully, a rich Dom. When Sully's car gets stuck in a snow bank, he comes to the library to call a tow truck (although why a rich man wouldn't have a cell phone in this day and age...). Essentially, this piece is a long sex scene. Outside of Lisette telling the reader about her life in the early pages, the story is a description of Lisette's and Sully's sexual encounter with some sexy dialogue thrown in.This is a pretty ordinary story that could have benefited from some editing, suffering from typos, rampant misuse of commas, and one or two dangling participles—all of which make the story more difficult to read. Continuity errors also detract from the story. For instance, at one point the story says, "Wrapping his fingers around my bound wrists, he slides his legs between them, so I look as if a child wrapped around their fathers’ leg." In the next paragraph, it says, "My hands still bound in front of me, dangle." Sometimes the movements and placement of body parts didn't seem to quite add up.Still, there are some hot moments. If you're looking for arousal rather than a complex story, One Night of Sin might work for you.