Review: Good concept, but .  . .
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 20, 2013
The story was fun, but obviously from an inexperienced author.  The dialogue was stilted and unrealistic.  It's always a good idea to read dialogue aloud to be sure it sounds natural.  None of us would say,  "I am going to try that door."  We'd say "I'm going to .  . ."  It also would have worked better with some suggestion as to why these people ended up as they did.  With a little guidance, this could have been a good freshman effort.