Review: Great start but a little rough around the edges.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 20, 2013
I really did enjoy this story but I had a few issues. The characters needed a little more flesh and dimension and there were a few issues of continuity that had me bugged. First of all, there was an uneven and unbelievable ( even for Post Apoc lit) evolution of the crisis. First of all, food or the lack there of ,it wasn't addressed very well. How does an army of 5000 travel on foot fast and hard 2 months after an event of the magnitude alluded to? They would require massive quantities of food and this wasn't even touched upon. With hundreds of thousands of people looting and pillaging, food would have been in short supply very fast. There is one "scene" where  we have  townspeople  stealing horses for food( knowing there were few other means of transportation, this would be a desperate act) and a page later our protagonists are raiding the hotel mini bars for snacks and liquor only a few yards away? Nobody else ever though to shoot the locks off the room doors? Not even the employees who  would stock those mini bars every day? this just doesn't balance for me.Sanitation. disease caused by the lack of clean running water, these aspects could have used a bit more attention. How or why was Luigi using a bathroom in a store when water would have been long gone without electricity to feed the systems. The biggest question I have though,at what point did XXXXXXX's mother become his wife?? About 2/3 of the way through XXXXXXXX tells our party that he HAD to help the Rev Hill and his army because they had his mother( location 3503 on my kindle) yet at the Sears Tower he goes off in search of his wife LOL They later ride off into the sunset, man and wife..leaves me wondering what happened to Mom ..hmmmm...There are other little issues, some are proof reader things, some are themes not finished or  underdeveloped. The story has great promise but could use a little tiding up. I look forward to other works by this author, I suspect that a little polish will really make his work shine.EDIT: I realized I let a cat out of the bag so I edited the name out, but if you read the book you know who it is :)