Review: Interesting Concept But Needs Work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 16, 2013
I liked the idea behind this book and think that the series (if there is to be one) has potential.  That potential will only be realized if the author works very hard to fix the grammar, spelling, and vocabulary; there are so many errors that it was difficult to focus on the story.  Some examples: we keep hearing about the 'moral officer' - well, she may be a moral person but she's a morale officer; second, the way to make a plural is not to add an apostrophe before the s, which makes it possessive - just add the s; third, just because a word is pronounced the same as another word doesn't make it the same word, it just makes it a homonym - 'there' and 'their' are two different words with two different meanings; fourth, get a thesaurus and make sure the word you use, even if spelled properly, is the word that fits what you're trying to say.  OK, enough griping about what good editing produces, now let's move along to picking up the pace of the story, which is basically a series of vignettes about fixing things that are broken, coupled with the random science lesson.  Put another way, ratchet up the action and create some conflict or suspense.  The supposed conflict with the Chief (of security) was lame and juvenile, the the explanation we finally get was just plain contrived.  Lastly, it was annoying to me that certain things just were known all of a sudden without explanation:  first, our hero is Admiral Irons with everyone assuming that his first name was Admiral; then, all of a sudden everyone knows he is an admiral.  How does this happen? We're never told.