Review: Good idea, poor execution
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 16, 2014
I didn't have a problem with the subject matter, they loved each other and only had 24 years between them, so I thought that aspect was good (I'm making an effort to read more kink). But the execution, the writing, made me laugh...at it. After the first couple of pages of explanations, it seemed stilted and too contrived. I didn't connect with the characters one bit. Within the few pages, there were three mentions of Hank's 10 1/2 inches, lots of unnecessary exclamation points, and dialogue that sounded awkward. Maybe some people do speak like that, but for me those things just made this story farcical for me.