Review: Disappointing
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 30, 2013
I really wanted to enjoy the second story in this series, but I was very disappointed instead. I was expecting a romantic alien space story, and got a boring story about an uber rich woman who seemed awfully full of herself and her oh so greatness towards the little people: her servants and the other abducted women. Did we really need to hear in excruciating detail about her getting just the right size box to keep their DNA proof in? And that is just one example of all the boring things her and Zane did while on earth. I kept plodding along expecting them to get back on the ship and have the story actually be about aliens and earth women in space. It seems quite clear, to me at least, that english is not the authors first language. At least some of the editing errors are a result of this. I totally agree with the other reviewer about S. E. Smith haveing the same editing errors when she started out, but she definitely fixed those problems and I LOVE her stories. Since I'm venting, there were a few things that made no sense in the two stories. In the first one, there is no way Lars would have been allowed to "bid" on any of the earth women, especially Avery, after being so violent towards her. With Zeb being Commander of the ship he would have had the authority to have him in the brig from such behaviour, and Lars still could have plotted to get even with Avery for the storyline. And why the heck wouldn't the women have been given a way to contact their "husbands" on the ship if they needed to being that they are so advanced and all. And speaking of which, why on a ship the size of a small state with around 10,000 beings on it would there be only one doctor? Come on! I could see where he would be the head doc, but not the only doc. What if two or more of all those people lost their arms at the same time? I could go on but hopefully you get the point.After having said all that, I would like to point out that I think the two women do have potential as authors. And I appreciate the low cost of their books, but at least have an American or english speaking friend or friends read through and make corrections as you go along so that all the editing errors are cut down on. It is pretty obvious that he third book is about Emma and Brylon but can you give us more about what life is like on Theron? Or the different beings on the ship and all the different shops? We heard all about Grace's world in the second book adnausium, but when they finally got back to the ship (which was mostly in the first book) and then the planet the story zoomed right to the end. I will get the third book but if it is just a rehash of the first two, I will have to give up on these authors.