Review: Interesting concept but needs editing desperately!
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 29, 2013
I really liked the concept of the story and I truly believe that I would have been able to rate it much higher if the editing was not so bad, not to mention the way the formatting was for my kindle didn't mesh well in a lot of places.  There were huge chunks of the story missing it seemed, totally confusing in parts.  For one, it goes from Nikki who had just opened a gift from Merrick and the next thing with no explanation at all she is in the forest on a rescue mission for his brother.  No transition or explanation at all. I did read the whole story because I can't stand it when someone writes a review especially if it is less then a good one if they didn't give it a chance to the end.  Granted sometimes that is just not at all possible if the story is so bad but as I said, I liked the story. In saying this, it was as I said a very good concept, unique to anything I have read previously.  The sex scenes were pretty good if a little awkward in some parts as if the author is uncomfortable with the word choices she uses.  There is a lot of words missing throughout the whole story which distracted from it and made it a little frustrating.  If this story was edited considerably, it would worth continuing reading the next part.