Review: Need Work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 30, 2014
I'm only halfway through this book. Normally, I wouldn't leave a review until I've finished, but I'm not sure I will finish reading this book.While the characters are somewhat interesting.....varied personalities, ages and social standings, they read flat. Part of that comes from the authors indecision on exactly how they should speak. While you have a character...Doogie...who routinely calls people "yous", you also see him speaking in proper words. To go from saying "They are here now. That's all that matters" to "Yous don't know what I want at all. Maybe I should bash yous in the head too."  in a matter of one paragraph, leaves a reader confused. Each character does this same thing. They go from their own idiosyncratic voices, to a very formal use of language. Also, there is a lack of description that would give a reader a picture of each. It leaves the reader wondering if the characters, and their situations, were thought out, or simply written right off the cuff.Another problem with this book is the number of story lines the author attempts to follow. None, of the particular three I have encountered, are complete. It isn't just a matter of switching, every chapter....it's more a matter of incomplete ideas and lack of conviction on which story the author truly wants to tell.With a little work, and some good editing, this could be a very good read. Typos are to be expected, but some are just beyond the norm. One word unfinished, the next partially missing, both joined to form one word. Several instances of double words, which don't belong anywhere within the sentence they are found in.I'd consider reading another of this authors books IF the author decides exactly who, what and where he is going with it first.