Review: Alive/day to die
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 09 22, 2012
I like how you have edited the book. The new placement of the discussion about the Decogon sign was good. But a bit uncertain if taking part about how Decca pronounce her name was a good or bad idea in my mind. Saw you changed name of city from Cubberlay to Eve that I liked. I like most of the addition of Decca talking to herself and seeing more of her thought process. Enjoyed the add of Leo and Decca conv in ch 4 him telling her not to enter the games. Confused about one thing you got rid of the subtitles from part 2-4 but kept part 5 The Breathing Dome. Was that an oversight or what? It just popping up with part five could confuse people. Over all I did not see many grammatical errors but not not that good at seeing them when I read books unless I am really paying attention. Over all the revamp of book is good.