Review: unprofessional effort
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 09 29, 2012
I wasted 99 cents.  My own fault.  I don't always read or attend to the reviews, and I figured, 'short story, quick read, interesting premise.'  This is possibly the most awkwardly constructed tale I've read in a long long time. The characters are like paper dolls the writer moves around a very hazy landscape.  There's a good deal of talk, and interior dialogue, and not much action.  What action is protrayed is disjointed. It was hard to finish this short piece. I thought it might have been a first effort, but no.  It's just amateurish and badly in need of good editing. Don't waste your money.