Review: Good Start, Still Needs Work
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 4, 2013
Chapter one really have me interested, how had Alex and Bree meet.  what caused the proposal to even come into place.  The story will start off strong then whim out.The base of the story is good, the author has a brunch of good scenes.  However, the sex scene between Alex and Bree were great.  But you really shouldn't use the dialogue of one character with another character.  It just doesn't work for me.I became confused because of Bree and James issue, there seems to more than what I reading.  More background needed to enhance this tension and make it more real.  The scenes are seem croppy.The story is good, but needs some dressing up and more background.  Please Ms. Holloway, keep writing and spinning your stories.  I can see that you will get better.