Review: Well written, good story...But the hero was an ass
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 16, 2013
Not to excuse the heroine, who, as another reviewer put it, must have some neural connections missing, but seriously, what is so attractive about this guy? Either he has the animal magnetism and pheromones of a veela or far more charisma than the worst godmodded character in D&D; to do the things he does and get away with it.Spoilers ahead, read at your own caution:He had a cold mother and was duped by well practiced spy, well cry me a river, apparently he seems to think this justifies him of literally ripping a toddler out of his mother's arms -a mother and toddler whose carriage had just frigging been TURNED OVER, and likely because of his own actions- but hey, she was running away, right? and where, exactly, was this guy when the lady's husband, his cousin, died? because they had never met before! Can you believe that?and you'd think, you keep thinking "oh, he'll get better, surely he will, I'm sure there's something nice about him...?" and no, he *doesn't*. He treats her awfully, constantly insults her and her position and her honor and she still spreads her legs and falls in love with him? Girl, how can you have so little self respect? The worst part is that all characters were okay, heroine included. I actually liked her a lot, if only we could rid her of her inexplicable attraction for this ass. You know what, if she'd change her mind about him after the middle point where he goes beyond what's forgivable and decided to hit off with the ever-present romantic alternative? I would have been perfectly ok with this. i would have *liked* this vastly more. Gentleman? gentleman my ass, gentlemen wouldn't make don't make a lady, the mother of your nephew and ward be used as a servant, much less enter while she's changing, STAY and paw her and make lewd propositions to.Oh, so he strolls in and the girl is half naked, so the grandmother leaves him there....why, exactly?? And later he stays in her room all night, what about the scandal? well, compared to letting her get dragged to jail, that should be nothing, right? And the guy's constantly wondering why she's skittish and distrusting of him and why she isn't over it and forgiven him already, I mean, he apologized, that should make everything right, right?There is honestly nothing about this hero that makes him even remotely likeable. So he's hot and apparently he can spend 20 minutes in the company of a child and that should tell us he's a good guy, unfortunately every time he actually *does* or *says* something, what he shows is exactly the opposite. Also, If you are trying to prove the woman is an unfit mother and catch her in the act, maybe you shouldn't *tell* her so?Augh, i feel bad, giving such a low score to a rather well-written work, but the male protagonist sapped any and every enjoyment I could have had of this piece.