Review: I got whiplash and space sickness over what could have been a good book.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 27, 2013
Ah Mike, I got the very badly edited version of your book. The many typos,misspellings, and misused words just drove away any enjoyment. When I overlooked those grungy foothills of the book, there were at times some good dialogue, a bit of fun in the telling. But I think what bothered me too, was the constant back and forth of NOW and THEN. It would have read better to all be in the adventure of the NOW, and do dear author put some dates not some vague thing that has the reader going about in circles. You have some good talents to tell a crisp story, just use better tools in the telling.I do understand the main character's feeling of remorse for what he could not save, but keep the story relevant to the reader, and only occassionally take us back. I felt like I had whiplash after reading a few chapters. I dogged my way through the book, and never could finish it because of the covoluted mess it had become. I think another edited revision of this book would be helpful and more enjoyable. This is only an honest critique from one writer to another. Good luck.