Review: It's ok, but... .
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 22, 2013
The premise was very good, but the heavy-handed attempts at humorous dialog were flat and distracting. You could almost feel the wheels grinding in the author's head.More practice is needed to achieve sparkling dialog.The author was apparently attempting to be witty, but was only half right.Keep trying though, because the story was interesting. Just really work on the "humor", and the dialog.The characters would have been more believable had they been a bit more serious, considering their careers and assignments. And the continuous 'banter' between them was I thought fairly juvenile.I think the author will improve given time.