Review: Good story, not enough to it
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 23, 2012
This was a good story and I think had the possibility of being a great story. It just never made it for me. I liked Keith, but felt his character could have been flushed out a bit more. Plus, if he was that dominant, I had a hard time imagining him falling to pieces just because of a good BJ. Sarah seemed almost personality-less. I could never truly get a read on her.I think it it had been lengthened, if we had truly gotten to know each of the characters a bit more, it would have gone up to 4 stars. If the sex scenes would have been more intense, then 5 stars.The only character to me that really popped was Keith's secretary. I could imagine her clearly.There seemed to be a lot of telling and not enough showing. Showing will help your reader get more in touch with the characters.Will keep an eye on this author though - definitely has potential.