Review: Not a real short story
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 09 30, 2011
I was prepared to like this story - hired killers can really be fun to read about.  There were likable parts to this story, but overall, I felt a bit robbed of my time.The item description warns us that "the mysterious stranger pulling the strings may just have an ulterior motive in mind."  Well, he may, but we'll never know because the story cuts off before it gets into any of it.  It's more like a vignette than a short story.  The author is clearly seeking to get us interested in the full length novel featuring the main character.  That would be fine - but don't make the item description sound like this is an actual story and don't call it a short story.I also didn't get why the main character would wake up the mark before killing him.  He was all like, "I think I have a way to do this killing."  Then he broke into the guy's house, woke him up, chatted with him, and shot him.  Master plan there!  I think the conversation was just to further increase the word count.The writing style had potential, but details felt off and the plot was lacking.