Review: Too Much Informing, Not Enough Showing, OR Blah, Blah, Blah
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 25, 2013
I was looking forward to reading this short about an American Hero getting hot and heavy .  The problem is while I was reading "Conquering Zeus", I never felt like I was in the story.  When I read a little erotica, I like to feel as if I am in the story. That it is my breathe coming in gasps.  I like to get that lovely tingly feeling.  Instead I felt like I was in a Charlie Brown cartoon when an adult speaks.  Sound with no meaning.The story begins with Zeus swimming in the ocean, as he tries to forget the girl he saved.  As he swims, the reader is told how he saved the girl, but we never get the emotions as the rescue happens.  We are told he feels something, yet I never felt his angst.An example of telling.."Yeah, baby. I've done that too often already. Do it every time I get stateside and I cost myself sanity, big time. Cost you yours too, judging by the sultry look in your eyes when I arrived at your condo door bearing flowers." (These were Zeus' thoughts, not dialogue)Instead of letting the characters dialogue let us know what happened, the author just tells us.  I felt as if I was outside looking in, instead of being inside the characters.As far as the intimate scenes it was more talk than action and I am not referring to the dialogue between the characters. "Picky, she had found only a few she liked enough to screw. But this man appealed to every nerve in her body, every synapse in her over-active brain. He was whip smart. Funny."In addition I had difficulty determining whether the author was trying to write an erotic short or a short novel. To have an epilogue in a story of 58 pages did not make sense to me.  The space would have been much better spent in showing how the relationship and emotions developed between the H/h. It would have been better to show how the H/h go from attraction to love. In that way their declarations of love would have meant something.  Instead, I found their declarations detracted from the story. But then I don't enjoy declarations of love after 3 meetings without learning the difference between the personas and the persons.  The attraction and lust of the story I understood. The fairy tale epilogue I found a bit much.I don't recommend this story.