Review: OK,
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 2, 2013
The story was OK.  The people were nice.  However, there needs to be some rework on the writing.  It switches very quickly back and forth between the main characters, without any warning.  The last chapter is definitely needs some work.  Instead of living in the story at that point, it feels like someone telling it to you and not all that well.  I don't regret reading it, but I think the author has opportunity for improvement.  She definitely has some skills to start with, but a good editor or constructive criticism would help.