Review: So-so
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 1, 2014
This is a chapter in a book.The writing was interesting, though packed with passive voice, filters, and mostly telling and not showing. All detract from the full enjoyment of the chapter.I'm not a fan of instant hook-up stories, and this is one. The characters meet in a book shop where Jem works, they go out for dinner, and end up in bed. I didn't feel the chemistry between the characters at all, but then in 14 pages, that is difficult to pull off.Jem is shy, he doesn't touch others or let them touch him, but we don't get an explanation as to why. Carlton seems caring, but predatory. His bedroom behavior should have frightened Jem out of his wits. Jem seems child-like and almost feminine in his reactions.There was no use of condoms, which for a story about strangers, is a massive oversight. Also, the mechanics of the sex act - one finger, two fingers, then, "Carlton drove home with one searing thrust." An easing in is the way it is done, as there is pain involved that again was overlooked, except that it is "delicious." The way the act was performed is simply unrealistic.There were many cliched phrases I've read in too many novels: He pulled out and slammed in; "...the trail of dark hair that ran down the centre of his chest and over his stomach, disappearing under his belt" are just a couple.Quick, easy read. I won't continue the series due to the pricing of the installments. Even the combined version is much more than I'm willing to pay for 97 pages total, each chapter averaging 14 pages. Combined, this series of chapters should sell for $2.99, but the first one is free, and the other 6 are $2.99 each. The bundled version is $9.99. The first chapter sadly didn't hook me into the rest.