Review: Not as good as the first
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 29, 2012
First, let me say the two Keeley Thomson books I've read so far read like parts of the same book instead of separate books.  I'm not saying that's a bad thing, just saying . . .The first book (Demon Girl) I liked well enough to think it deserved 4 or 5 stars.  It was a fast read with great premise.  This second book (Keelzebub) isn't quite as successful and it isn't because it's not a good story.  There are a number of problems with this book.The writing needs SERIOUS cleanup.  It reads like someone spell checked it but didn't proof read it to ensure a smooth read.  The writing displaying a concerting number of two, too, to issues (words that sound the same but means something different).  The punctuation is sketchy in places making sentences difficult to understand without rereading.  It's lacking commas and breaks that would clarify the meaning.  I hate having to reread to get the meaning.  Double parentheses are used inside dialog instead of single parentheses.  Sloppy.The story line problem involves the age of the main character.  She jumps from being a 16 year old to being a hundred years old back to being a 16 year old.  Hello?  Just sloppy.  She goes from being bottom of the rung in power to most powerful and back and breaks rules established in previous writings with no consequences attached.  She becomes Mistress of Souls without a clear explanation of how that transition occurred.  Her parents behavior changes too abruptly with no adequate explanation.So, it's a great story if you can get past the sloppy writing and grossly liberal ideology.  I'm only giving it three stars but am still recommending it as a good read.  Better housekeeping would have made it a great read.