Review: Something like a draft
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 15, 2014
Somewhere amidst the problems this book has is a good story waiting to be told. Unfortunately, it reads too much like a draft to be really good. And that's the real problem with self publishing.Among the problems, the biggest one that jumps out at me is that there is not much of a story arc in this book. That is partly due to the fact that it is cut off at a non-ending point and partly due to the holes in the story itself. It will have several pages of good satisfying reading and then suddenly jump to an unrealistic reaction or comment, or break off into the backstory with no setup or reason. It becomes extremely disjointed in many places and that leads to some rather wooden dialog and unbelievable responses from characters.A good workshopping and a real editor would do this book a world of good...the problems are enough to deserve a lower rating, but the story is compelling enough for 3*--I hope the author does some work on it. It deserves to be great.