Review: Editing and proof reading please!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 2, 2014
The misuse of words in what could be a very good story is a shame.  There are so many times when sentences like "I smiled at me" when what is meant is "I smiled at HIM" that it would throw me out of the story, so that it will be a bit of a trial for me to finish.  The slightly stilted way of phrasing is not near as bothersome as the misuse of pronouns.  Yet I am interested enough in the outcome that I will finish.  I can only hope the next two books in the series are better edited and proof read.