Review: There's Innocent, There's Naivety, and There's Too Stupid To Live.
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 06 3, 2014
Innocence:  Looks around. Keeps mouth shut.  Trusts smarmy looking one and learns lesson.  Remembers lesson.Naivety:  Believed what she's being told, observes those around her, but comes up with rational reasons why someone would do something she thinks is mean.  Doesn't always learn her lesson the first time.  Usually needs really good friends to keep her out of trouble.Too Stupid To Live: Liberty.The Book started off GREAT.  Good Writing, good inner dialogue, good characterization, good pacing.  Chapter Six, fantastic...almost.By the end of chapter six, when Liberty does something unbelievably stupid, under the author's misguided belief that she was showing Liberty in a heroic, selfless act, is when she first revealed that Liberty was TSTL.And then, as if there were a Jekyll and Hyde moment, another author took over and the baffling became idiotic.  Not only did the story take on a bizarre twist, but the writing became sloppy and almost unedited.  "You must be starved," John said.Three paragraphs later, about how she was now feeling, "You must be starved."  (Not verbatim, but you get the idea).Oh, and in case you were wondering, she's not stupid alone.  Oh, no. John joins in the game, too.  Embarrassingly.I can't, in all good consciousness, reveal more of her or his stupidity without spoilers, so either you'll take my word for it, or you won't.If twenty-one year olds are this stupid, they should be required to be licensed before being allowed to wander the streets alone.New authors...let your friends read your work and encourage you but, for God's sake, let a professional mentor you.Not Going to read any more and you can't make me.  Good luck Ms. James.