Review: Don't do it!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 3, 2011
The authors should get an editor or at least proof their own work. I don't like reading stories that I have to read the same sentence a couple of times because a word has been used out of context/misspelled.  I found this to occur quiet frequently throughout this story.  The writing made me think of a first time writer.  Some of the language used by so-called wealthy businessman (Andrew) was juvenile at times and this story was all over the place--I kept reading because I wanted to know what other scenario would be created.The authors did not let me down: from a grown woman living in the basement of her own home because she was so beaten down, to a child being poisoned (hint: sick child + boric acid + life insurance on said sick child = murder), to the attorneys' secretary telling your business, to your mentally ill and abusive, greedy aunt, to your friend building something in his basement and sewing a jacket with many pockets.  Then you find your daddy and he has kids who are crazy and try to kill you, but wind up shooting you 3x and putting you in a coma for months...but first you almost fall down a well into a pool of chemicals.Finally the female is kidnapped and placed in a box to die, but thank the Lord for the many pocketed jacket that her ex-friend gave her and secretly filled with water bottles and sunflower seeds to keep her & baby alive for days.  She was smart to take off her dress to cover up her waste and keep the fumes down--must've learned that in college.Then enter investigator Oynx, who has a brother name Lethal (I laughed out loud).  Oynx is like a cartoon superhero that can do anything, but wind up being into Andrew--I figured if they get together they would have a mutant baby with superhuman strength, but he is not interested.  Why Onyx would wait around for the cops when she could have broken into the homes and found Shane much earlier, I don't know.  But at least her vehicle was outfitted so Andrew could hook up his laptop and catch up on his work, while they were watching the houses.  They even see the ex friend give the crazy cousin a wrapped rifle and still don't make a move.I felt no chemistry between Shane and Paul--they should have just been friends, esp with his condition.  There was chemistry between Shane and Andrew but the authors failed to really spend time developing it.  It was freaky with Paul having to be in the bedroom telling his brother how to give her pleasure--for Pete's sake this was a grown man that just happen to be a workaholic, he wasn't a virgin. Andrew could have read a book or looked at some porn--Paul came across as a participating sex therapist.  It was tacky for Andrew to walk in and see Shane's head in Paul's crotch.I wound up reading one line on each page and not missing anything where this story was concerned.  It was as though neither author communicated while writing this.  I usually enjoy Ms Hubbard's work--this time I did not.