Review: Details mean so much
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 17, 2014
This book suffered from a lack of details where there should have been details, and far too many where they should have been glossed over.Sarah's trips to the grocery store were detailed out, down to everything she bought. This wasn't really important to the story. This, and all the details about the business plan she laid out for her new business, should have been summarized in some way in favor of details for her relationship with Brad. Instead, it was the other way around. Days with Brad were glossed over. "They talked." "He spent almost every night in her bed." Well, how many nights, what did they talk about? For a romance book, the romance fell short, and when the conflict came, the resolution was a big "huh?" moment. If they're going to be in love with each other, show that. Instead, there was more relationship development between Sarah and Vijay, her main investor for her businesses. I knew more about Sarah's preference of technology than I did about her relationship with Brad.Other things annoyed me as well. The grocer came off creepy. He was married, and yet took a box of groceries to Sarah when she hadn't been into the store in days. All of the internal struggle for Sarah on how beautiful Ellie was became tiresome after the fifth time. She suspected that her high school boyfriends dated her in order to be closer to Ellie. Yet, they never did anything to prove this theory other than look at Ellie. Are they supposed to have blinders on? So, Ellie was beautiful, yet Sarah wasn't? Then why were all the men in this book telling her how pretty she was? That entire part of the book could have been left out, and added so much. Also, hinting that Sarah was approaching "middle age" - more than once - led the reader to believe that she was like late 30's, or 40's, yet Ellie was in her 20's. So, Sarah would have been as well. Wording choice can make a huge difference.Details, in the right spots, could have greatly improved this book.