Review: A Good Idea That Needs Reworking & Editing
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 31, 2011
The idea for the story was good, though the fact that these vampires don't really feed but still leave marks on the neck confuses me. I gave the book 2 stars because there is possibility here; it just needs to be reworked and needs a lot of editing. I began paying more attention to the misspellings, too many spaces, too many periods, too many parts that didn't line up with what just happened, etc., and that detracted away from the story for me. The vampire didn't really show up until the end of the book which was a big let down for me as well.The love story was too forced, way too fast, and way too unrealistic to even care about. Her family was ridiculous...it was not something I could buy into at all. While I don't like a book that is overly descriptive, this book is under descriptive and I couldn't see anything that was happening or feel what the characters were going through. I think the author has a vision and she probably sees it all clearly in her head, but getting it down on paper where everyone else is drawn into the story is the hard part.Reviewed by Jessica for Book Sake.