Review: nice story, bad editing.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 31, 2014
The story is enjoyable but hard to follow at times. There are places where parts of the book seem to be missing. It was hard to really feel anything for the characters and I don't know if it was the reserved, no nonsense manner of storytelling or the editing that caused this problem. As to the editing there was a mess of wrong gender pronouns, missing pronouns, prepositions and all sorts of other words. Sentences that were written one way and then another and ended up being written both ways. Here's a sample: "...she gave her a sly smile slyly." I think with some proper editing the story would really shine.