Review: Its ok, BUT!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 15, 2013
As of the half way point, all you get is repetition to fill up space. EVERYTHING written could have been condensed by 75%.  Its scene after scene of saying the same thing, but in different words. The relationship of the 3 MC's hasnt showed much progression. Even the "visions" are the same ones. Like a film strip shown cell by cell. Nikki's feelings of inferiority are getting out of hand. Anyone this weak in the mind needs a touch of Darwin. Poor little me feelings just dont seem to stop. If you choose "Fate" as a focal point of how things in your story are threaded together, why do you have a MC who REFUSES to acknowledge it?All the above is written with the concept that the author means for the book to be a story and not just an excuse to write smut. So far, and I'm only half way now, I have no concept of plot. Also, I have not found any new characters in the story. Its as if everything is happening in a bottle. IF I rated this story RIGHT NOW, I would give it 1/2 of one star.Small rant: "Carded". Its annoying and WAY over used. Stop using it please. I dont know a single person who has ever used it before in the way you do. If it is an old colloquium, then its way to old to fit in a modern tale. If it was found as a synonym then its still not modern and still should not be used.60% into story. A plot seems to have appeared. 6 new characters arrive. Scenes are still repeating, 2 pages to describe the 2 pages preceding it, describing a vision that was one cell away from the last vision.BTW, What is the life span of the pack members? Nikki accepted it, but didnt wonder what it meant.80% into story.  Still no plot development. I thought one was being introduced, but it seems to have stalled, or its meant to be the plot for another triads story. Still no real relationship feel to this story.  But at least the MC seems to have stopped with the negative self assessment and moved on to the dripping "I love you"'s.90% done. We get an event. During which, the doctors and head alpha/beta accompany Nikki's men to her rescue. After her men are injured, she drives them BACK TO THE RANCH to be treated by the doctor, who was originally at the rescue location.The doc remained at the scene, and as I suspected, it was for reasons that will be told in a future book, I'm sure. Book either needs to be seriously revised(which would make it a good 75% shorter, or it needs to be taken out of the classification of a story and put into basic smut or porn category.End of book. Its gonna have to be rewritten for me to five it a better rating. I'm giving it one full star for editing- except for a few minor errors, thats about all it has going for it. Its a straight forward sex book, and not much else.  It does have a HEA, so that will count for something too. I had to skim a lot over all the sex scenes and redundancy.