Review: Fallen Souffle
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 12 29, 2013
The bare bones of a story were almost in there, but it never quite cooked up.Good:  The bakery setting, the bad guy, the idea of a half wolf/half witch character.Not So Good:  Character development was too superficial for me to care about them (except the bad guy, who was far more sympathetic than the whining, insecure heroine).Bad:  The lack of commas where needed, run on sentences, inconsistent paragraphs or the total lack of new paragraphs for pages, homonym mistakes, leaving out quotes, characters speaking as though they were doing a nineteenth century oration rather than actually talking to each other -- this is too messy to have been uploaded for sale.This is so not a keeper.  Save your money for independent authors who take more care with characterization and storytelling, and who actually proofread and properly format their work.