Review: Hoped for nostalgic fun but denied
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 19, 2014
When I first heard about this series, I really looked toward to reading it. It sounded like it would be fun and remind me of all those times I played pen and paper role-playing games like Dungeons and Dragons. I do have to say it definitely reminds of those games, but not in a good way.The writing has two huge problems. First, the author seems to make every grammatical mistake possible. He doesn't use quotation marks or apostrophes. There are numerous instances of using the wrong word especially off and of, to for too, and is for his. Verb tenses are often wrong as well. Dropped and extra words abound. Capitalization is often ignored or used at the wrong time. Sentence fragments are not uncommon. The list goes on and on but you should get the point by now.The second problem is that it reads like someone's (this is the correct way to use an apostrophe which eludes the author ) game notes. As I was reading , I could practically hear the characters rolling dice. There is a distinct difference in how you should relate information in a game and in a story.Together,  these  two elements make the stories almost unreadable. If either of these problems were addressed, it would help tremendously. If both were fixed, then I could see a possible 4 or 5  star rating.I would gladly let the author be a game master for a role-playing session. He came up with some good game ideas. But he needs to do a lot of work before I could recommend his story writing.