Review: Losing the thread
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 11, 2014
This is where a good editor should be in place.  The author is losing her "snark" for the heroine and there are plot issues which desperately needed looked at prior to any publishing. Will you, as a reader, stop buying the Housewife Assassin books?  Of course not - you've read this many and now you are invested!Spoilers - so don't read further:  Jack is massively unsupportive of our heroine's chance at running a mission - and the author wonders why readers aren't enamored with him?  And let's not forget the ongoing slams about Donna's weight - aren't we supposed to believe she is a delicious honeypot, not that she is unappealing?  Practicalities:  two experienced and world-aware secret agents let a 5/6 year old child go off with Babette without knowing where or who else (Lee) and don't do a background check, much less GPS the kid?  And did I miss the conversation when, having told Donna she needs to let Mary be more independent, the girl nearly gets raped because - hey! - she is 12 years old and a child ... anyway, did I miss the conversation where Donna tells Jack he is an idiot and has no idea how to parent?  Oh, the continual jealousies of Donna, which makes no sense and have now been done over the top ... and Jack is upset about Dominic?  Really?So many loose ends, a sign of a series without editing.  Did Donna ever follow up to see who's baby Valentina was carrying?  No - because she's never jealous and Jack is always home with her nights and told her all about Valentina every step of the way and never tried to hide their encounters ... exactly how was Donna's SWAT arrest explained to the neighborhood?Anyway, once you have read this far in the series, it is a disappointment to realize that your heroine is no longer quite so heroic, that her love interest is still going to be a jerk, and that the motherly instincts to protect and keep safe your children have wandered off as you keep your children with you on an island slated for poisonous gases to be released.I would suggest to the author that she find some people who actually want her stories to be the best they can be, not just tell her how wonderful they are and look for punctuation and spelling errors.  In the long run, this will make your work better.