Review: Badly Written Vampire Erotica
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 06 15, 2013
I did not enjoy this story.These should have been entitled vampire erotica, as there is more of that type of story than anything else - there is certainly no story line except `vampire meets girl, they have sex'.I found it too banal and like so very many other stories, the same trite phrases and scenes. In this story there were fragmented pieces, at least the way it read to me - she was `grilling' and it seems to be happening in her living room - although the smell wafts in too, so who knows where this was taking place? It was dark but she danced around the room without hitting one single piece of furniture? She was frightened and `he' was menacing but although she thought of calling the police, didn't bother.There is a part that is so disjointed I thought it was a second story, where she was waiting for her air-conditioning to be fixed, and a few lines later she was one of those people who couldn't afford to buy air-conditioning. No, no and no.Why can people not check their stories are consistent and clearly written? The plot may be very good, but after a few of these writing errors, I cannot be bothered to continue as I can't figure out which version is supposed to be the truth!