Review: Bad editting and writing ruins this one for me
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 08 15, 2013
The author needs to spend some time on her craft- learning grammar, possessive pronouns, and vocabulary. The story itself isn't terrible although I don't know why she wants to try and justify cheating in order to be with your soul mate. And going between the 3 main characters in first person and delving into their feelings is try to justify it as the goal should be to make the reader relate to those characters. Yes- the story is told in first person. Lots of "I" and it was sometimes easy to miss the chapter heading that indicated you had changed perspectives. I get being with someone and also being attracted to someone else. I get that people make poor decisions. But I did not understand her choosing to go away with the man for extended trips and meet his friends and family. Overall many of the secondary characters motivations were never really explained and they popped in and out awkwardly in order to push the story forward when the author couldn't figure out the next step.If bad writing and editing bother you- then avoid this book. If they don't and the jacket blurb intrigues you then there is a good chance you might enjoy it. Ms. Carr doesn't understand the difference between your and you're. She routinely smashes two sentences into one long sentence complete- literally, its just missing punctuation to separate the two thoughts each with their own subject and verb. Example of my own: Some of them might work if she used punctuation but she appears to have an aversion to the humble comma there were many times when she uses the wrong word. Ms. Carr's vocabulary is lacking. Clasped when she was trying to say collapsed or tweet when it should have been tweak. Often they are words that she is probably mishearing in general speech but she doesn't bother to ever use a dictionary to make sure she is using the correct vocab. There are many odd turns of phrase (that I attribute to her being British) that further contribute to my poor impression of her writing/grammar skills. She has storytelling potential but her writing isn't up to par.This is just a personal thing- but I hate it when female characters "giggle." Intelligent, mature women like the one she wrote do not giggle. Especially when she isn't portrayed as a flirt or vapid. Giggling is irritating and immature. Little 8 year old girls giggle. Giggling in the written word should never happen unless you want people to have a poor impression of your character.