Review: Entertaining ideas, but needs more editing, character and plot development
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 17, 2013
I found some of the ideas entertaining, but felt it was a little hard to read due to grammar, sentence structure, and pacing issues. The main character was very flat, having very little in the way of goals or desires. If he had been trying to accomplish something, the story would have been more interesting. I found the conclusion to be very disappointing.