Review: more editing to story would have helped
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 28, 2012
this was an interesting story that I feel could have used more story editing to make it more concise. It read really slow. I got it for free during a free promo, so I was not disappointed, but I think it could have done better if it was editing more to make the pace of the story quicker. I would have given it a star less, if I had not gotten it for free.