Review: Good premise, bad writing
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 21, 2013
This could be a really great story, but the writing is awfully unpolished and rushed. It made me feel like the lines of this book were written along the windows of a bullet train in full motion. I just couldn't catch up with it. So much happened so fast, heaps of action packed into 59 Kindle pages (that must be about 40 pages in a Word document). Highly disconcerting. Severely underdeveloped story, characters that weren't fleshed out, to the point that they were like complete strangers to me when I was done reading. The whole story was very much like a childish cartoon. The sex scene was appallingly repetitive (expression-wise). I don't think I want to find out the answer to the questions that the author has so enticingly asked at the end of the book (I will not repeat them here because they would be a spoiler, but in practical terms they invite the reader to purchase the sequel to find out what happens next). Oh, I forgot to mention: this first instalment ends in a cliffhanger. It shouldn't have, it looks to me like it's just a chunk of a whole novel that was cut out and sold separately as a money maker.