Review: Unrealized potential
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 26, 2013
Ms.Curry, I haven't had the opportunity to read your other works, so bear with me if I am touching on some weaknesses with this book that you have otherwise professionally overcome.I'm not a grammar snob. The older I get the fewer rules I remember. I only ask that the grammar and structure be sufficient to not distract me from the story. Particularly in the beginning of this story, the run-on sentences, mis-used semi-colons, and awkward phrasing made it hard for me to "fall into" the story.The end of chapter 3 did not accomplish what you hoped it would accomplish.  It could have worked if chapter 4 had some refer-backs that filled us in on what had occurred "off screen."  Instead, reactions important to the story were lost.  It felt like there were pages missing.  When much later we did hear a bit about the party it was too little too late.To be honest, a wealth of the plot devices were pretty weak. But hey, it's a screwball romantic comedy, so we all agree to suspend our disbelief.  My major peeve is the planned marriage to Jason at the end. "He said he was sorry and my mother wants me to."  (Er... wasn't an undelying theme of the book about trust?)  This was followed by the equally lame, but at least formulaically anticipated: "But I like you more, so I will sleep with you and go marry you."This book had a lot of potential-- entertaining characters, movie parallels, a quick pace.  It just needed a bit of time with a literary editor to really shine.