Review: interesting story but weak writing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 23, 2013
A young widowed woman is vacationing in Florida with her two eight year old daughters. They meet a nice man and a friendship develops between Taryn and Michael. After Taryn returns to Nashville, her father-in-law threatens a custody suit. At that moment Michael shows up and offers her a marriage of friendship to save her from the custody battle. He makes it clear that he wants it to develop into a real marriage. Taryn is convinced that Michael is still in love with a woman that left him and that he would go back to her if she reappeared so she keeps her heart locked away, safe.This was a sweet story. The young twins were well written. They complimented the story, rather than taking away from it. The problem was the writing. There were a lot of misused words: shutter instead of shudder, lied instead of lay, dawning instead of donning, passed instead of past. You get the idea. The other problem was the tense of the POV, it kept alternating between past and present, sometimes within the same sentence. An intensive edit is needed.As I said, it was sweet story. The heat level was about 1/5, lots of cloud and wave references. Although this doesn't factor into my rating, it also is not formatted properly for the kindle. You cannot change the font and it defaults to a sanserif font. Even on the tightest setting, the lines are too far apart.