Review: Interesting story
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 03 20, 2014
The characters, location and story were 5 star but lack of editing knocked it down one because it disrupted the flow of the story that much.  For instance, in one paragraph Natalie decided to keep her hair down and went to the dining room, but in the next paragraph Mike tweaked her ponytail when he came to the table, and then, still at the table, her hair was down, without Natalie once touching it.  Also, there were too many sentences that had stray words in them, and there were other grammatical errors, as well.  If the book was cleaned up it would be a definite re-read.