Review: Decent premise poor execution
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 24, 2013
I wanted to like the book. I enjoyed the concept of a battered woman coming into her own. The title is misleading. There is no Dom, let alone two Doms. There is an abusive ex-boyfriend and two new boyfriends with boundary an self-control issues. The entire concept had execution issues. The heroine has self-esteem issues, but is able to arbitrarily assert her independence and take a stand. Some how she trusts the first man she meets, a lawyer. This lawyer does nothing to put protective measures in place for an abused and battered woman.Some times the heroine was extremely self-aware, while other times she seemed extremely naive and uneducated. The language used was at times perplexing and nit suitable. Who refers to their own hair as tresses?The book had pacing issues and could benefit from another beta reader to help highlight some of these issues. There appeared to be a formatting issue as pages of my version were simply white blocks. This is a decent rough draft, that has the bone flushed, but could be better with added outside input.