Review: Good story premise...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 12, 2014
It reads like fan fic, and needs some polish that a more accomplished writer would have given the overall story. An almost 40 year old woman does not speak in teenage vernacular, and in this story the heroine just sounds like she has occasions of lapses of maturity. Character development was so-so to me, and worldbuilding seemed like things were left out that would be more explanatory on why certain things happened. Punctuation was misplaced in quite a few places or used in the wrong places, and the writer should use italics for emphasis instead of using all caps for certain words. I pretty much finished it simply because I don't like to start even a mediocre book and not give it a decent chance. I read almost exclusively fantasy/sci-fi/paranormal books, and this story just really seemed flat to me, I simply lost interest. It's my understanding that this book is part of a series...I will not be reading the rest of the series, it just failed to keep my attention. I tried, but it just seemed lacking.