Review: Sentences Need Serious Work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 27, 2012
This story had pluses and minuses. One plus that kept me reading was the fantastic descriptions of New Orleans and the Bayou. It became in my thinking a most beautiful place. However, the sentences went against every writing rule I have studied. There was too much use of "be" verbs (had, has been, was, were). There were also telling verbs such as "felt" and "begun to" throughout the book. The over-abundance of these really hurt the story tremendously. The plot itself was a bit vague. I was confused at times by the language as to exactly what Sherry or Lucien were saying to each other, especially in some of her personal thoughts. The romance itself was very clean, which I appreciated. There wasn't as strong of an attraction between the characters as I like, but this was, again, probably because of the poor sentence structure. Overall a so-so read.