Review: This has all the elements of a great series -- just needs to be packaged better
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 01 22, 2014
I honestly think this could be a great series. I think the underlying story is fantastic and the two main characters have a lot of potential. This isn't there, though -- yet. First off, the book is too short so the romance angle is far too rushed. It needs another 100 pages or so of plot and pacing to push the story over. We need to see more of Chas as a person before she's falling all over these men and trying to jump in bed with all three of them -- just because they're hot. We need to see more of Chas questioning her surroundings and the people that have her. The fact that she's instantly trusting these people -- especially given her background in foster homes -- does not ring true.Second, the backstory of what Chas is, what Angelo and Aidan are and (especially) what Takeo is needs to be explored. Three or four paragraphs is not enough to explore this world -- and it's worth exploring. It really could be a fantastic story. It's just not quite there. It's so close I can taste it, but it falls just short. The ending could be all things epic -- but since the earlier stuff is so rushed some of the emotion in those final scenes is lost.Finally, the cover is like porn and doesn't reflect the genre. I would definitely redo that. In fact, I had the book for a decent amount of time before I read it because I was convinced -- because of the cover -- that it would be terrible. As it stands now, I like the first book. If it was expanded, I might love it and go on to read the second book. While I fully enjoyed the hour and a half it took me to read this, I didn't love it enough to move on to the second book. I hope the author expands the universe -- including adding some stuff to this book -- because I really do think it could be fantastic. Definitely dump the cover, though.