Review: Needs an editor and more
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 12, 2013
There were some good moments in this book, but they were far outweighed by the poor writing and total lack of knowledge of grammar and punctuation.  The author had a good idea, but that is not enough to make this a winner.There were interesting ideas here; the author chose some interesting ways to bring the H/h together and realize their feelings for each other.  However, the characters lacked the history and depth needed to make them seem real.  They were both gorgeous, I get that, but I never got a feel for what they were truly like.  Henry's family obviously was to play a key role in the story, but there was no sense of past to make them real.  I almost quit when Claire's emotional reaction in front of her new boss was blamed on "that time of the month" by him and she agreed.The writing itself was poor.  Quotes go on the outside.  Always.  This was beyond distracting.  This was how every piece of dialogue was structured:  "Can I stay with you tonight?", he asked.  What was up with the commas AFTER every quotation mark?  Quotes are like coats, they go on the outside...  The dialogue overall was poorly constructed with commas and quotes used to break up long speaking parts with no rhyme or reason.Word usage....seriously, how many times can people "smirk" in one page?  Loose and lose are not interchangeable  Spellcheck is not your friend if you don't pick the right one it suggests.  Him/he and her/she are not interchangeable.  Annoying, distracting, and unprofessional when you are asking people to pay money to read what you wrote.  Easy to publish ebooks are not an excuse to make us your beta readers.I got this on a "free on Amazon" promotion.  If I had paid money for it I would have returned it for a refund before the 20% mark.  The story itself has potential, but a heavy handed editor is needed before this book is worth paying money to read.