Review: Very sweet story, Very poorly edited.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 23, 2013
I am a retired professional proofreader.  Everything I read, I proofread automatically.  I cannot help it.  This is a really sweet story.  I like it a lot, and I would like to follow the romance of Jason and Brandon.  I have to like it a lot, because I agree with all of the other reviewers that the proofreading/editing on this story is appalling.  The only reason I read the whole thing, rather than giving up in disgust, is because the characters are enchanting.For future installments of this story, I'd like to see some depth added to the characters, including the sister, and a professional proofreader, not a machine, engaged.  Clearly, the machine cannot do the job.  The punctuation also needs some attention.Overall, this is a good effort, but it comes across as unprofessional because of all the errors.  I think this author can do better.