Review: Good story in need of an editor
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 04 5, 2012
I'm not sure how to categorize this short story; is it a paranormal story masked as erotic fiction, or the other way 'round? I generally don't read much "paranormal" fiction (werewolves, vampires, etc.), but decided to check out this freebie.  It's definitely a good story, well-conceived, effectively paced, with hot erotic scenes and interesting characters. It definitely made me look up the author's other work.Unfortunately, it's desperately in need of a proofreader, and would also benefit from some editing. (Yes, those are two different roles.)  This is a great example of what's right and what's wrong with self-publishing: a skilled author can use free distribution to tease a new, larger audience with a good story, but the lack of professional proofreading and editing make readers wary that we might pay for her other works only to find them riddled with problems that could prove fatal to a longer work.But eBooks allow for updating; I would encourage the author to do so for this work. If there's no budget for proofreading and editing, perhaps the author could use Craigslist.org or a similar site to recruit a volunteer (or 2 or 3) willing to do the work in exchange for attribution, to use as a reference for future work.