Review: Could use an editor, but the story makes up for it.
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 07 31, 2013
First things first, this could use an editor. There were a lot of problems with it, especially with possessive apostrophes, misplaced periods and commas, and its vs it's. There were enough of these errors that it slowed me down pretty substantially.Once you get past that, though, it's a fun story. Nerdery, necrophilia, and some very evocative writing. My kind of story. It has a lot of potential, with a meticulous editor, and maybe some tightening up. The pacing wasn't always smooth, and I found myself skimming a few passages, looking for the more solidly written italicized sections (the "current" situation, rather than the flashbacks).It's been a while since I read a true-to-form zombie story... A lot of times, they're less vivid than they probably could be. The Last Day in the Life of Jillian does a good job of balancing the necessity for true horror and gore with the need to engage with the humans surviving it.It could use some work, but it's still worth a read, if you aren't that breed of reader affectionately known as a grammar nazi.