Review: It Could have been so much better
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 22, 2013
Warning:  You eyes are going to almost pop out of your head when you just open the first chapter; forget that the first few paragraphs will do it.  I sure would have liked it a lot better if the language had been a little cleaner.  Really you need to drop the *F* bomb so often? Some of the other language was a bit rough too ( I believe it was unnecessarily so) I really don't like it when I feel like some of the story is sacrificed in favor of "hot sex scenes".  The people in it I liked and the story was different.  I found it a little hard to believe that Mari was quite that malleable when it comes to her first meeting with Devon.  She was practically play dough, asking very few questions.  I will give it to the author that the rest of the story was enjoyable.  Although I do have to note that there were some pages that I skimmed over.  Can you guess which ones those were?