Review: Cute Story, DESPERATELY needs editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 31, 2012
The story/storyline is really cute, but the writing in general leaves a LOT to be desired!!! Two authors, two different writing styles easily detectable. Way too many misspelled words, misuse of words, completely wrong words used (i.e., through used for threw), sentences that completely don't make sense, no correlation to story, changing from first person to third person point of view, etc. It takes away from the story when you have to constantly pause and try to figure out what the authors are trying to say. It is horrific in places. It's really too bad as the story has a lot of potential.