Review: Awkward writing
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 25, 2012
It mostly sounds like the writer was trying too hard. The dialogue between Sam and Beth is stilted, and there are a lot of awkward or convoluted phrases. Some examples:* "Deep blue eyes that skewed into a frown encumbered Beth's tender, oval face."* "The plans he had for their day that were swimming in his mind were disappearing into a Bermuda Triangle as he pondered her mood in that moment."* A large breakfast of eggs, Belgian waffles, bacon and sausages is referred to as a "cholesterol strangling plate"The beginning of the story has a tender tone, but the sex scene is not tender, and as an earlier reviewer has said, this change of pace and mood is abrupt. The sex scene also has awkward language and sounds just as unnatural as the rest of the story:* "She was beyond hot and bothered. She was at cocked and loaded."* "His tormented groin grew restless for her."I wouldn't say this book is good, although the story's premise is a lovely one.