Review: The Good, the Ugly and an Anomaly
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 2, 2013
The good part? Mr. O'Reilly has a good ear for natural English. Therefore, his writing moves along smoothly and is easy to read. He did a good job of depicting the scientist ("Loser"). The drug lord is enough of a stereotype that I nearly considered him comic relief (also the hillbilly). The setting was nicely done.The bad part? Mr. O'Reilly puts commas where they don't belong. He has a love affair with the unnecessary hypen. He uses just the wrong word or has entire sentences that simply don't make sense.I can't speak to the science involved, since I know nothing about organic chemistry and wasn't motivated enough to do research on pheromones.The ending didn't quite hold together; there is what I consider a big hole in the last few pages. Can't say more without revealing the punchline.I encourage Mr. O'Reilly to keep writing. He has a natural gift for it, I think, and can only improve. I'm going to email him with the specifics of items mentioned above.