Review: an idea that goes nowhere
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 3, 2012
This short story left me flat. There were a couple of grammatical errors ("new" instead of "knew"for one), but otherwise the writing was clear and as effective as it could be, given the fact that the whole story told instead of showed. The premise was interesting, but it was played out in a couple of pages. So much more could have been written to make it engaging. As it was, the reader is spoon-fed the relevant information, history, motivations and hopes, and there is simply no conflict, no resolution of worth, and that's that. I started the second story, but realized I didn't want to read any more of this author. Glad I picked this up for free.