Review: Needs an editor. NEEDS. AN. EDITOR!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 19, 2014
We'll, I'm a handful of pages in and here are some nifty little observations I'd like to share with the author:1.  "...had ran..." Let's examine the phrase "had ran" for just a moment so you can familiarize yourself with the IMPOSSIBILITY OF IT EVER HAPPENING. No matter how hard anyone tries, no matter how fast they're running, who it's with or their destination, no one, anywhere, will ever manage to "had ran." Never ever.2. Expanded vs. expended. Case in point "these gentlemen have expanded a lot of energy..." No, no they haven't. Unless they're into nuclear fission.  Do you happen to know if they own a large hadron collider? They might, possibly have EXPENDED a great deal of energy.  Which is what people do.3. And vs. or.  Additional case in point "there were no men in her coven and her house."  And her house what?  AND her house liked it that way? AND her house was always clean because of this dearth of testosterone? AND her house had vowed to accept linguistically challenged authors but not men, ever? I'm pretty sure you meant "...no men in her coven OR her house."Sorry if this seems harsh but...no...wait...I'm not a bit sorry. Because this is grade school, this is basic speech and sentence structure stuff here. And because this story line is interesting enough that I am going to continue to subject myself to what I can only imagine will be an ever downward spiral of abuse of our beautiful language just so I can see what happens to this idiot heroine who thinks people "expand" energy.Ugh.