Review: Could Have Been So Much Better
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 8, 2012
This book, as a whole, had a believable storyline concept; however, it could have been laid out and presented much, much better than it was.  At about 45%, I came real close to not having a desire to finish it due to various issues that took the glow away from this story.  One moment, the reader is drawn into specific aspects of the story, and then it would abruptly stop and go into a completely new thought pattern in the next paragraph.  It leaves the reader confused in numerous places about what is going on.  There is no logical flow, and it appeared, on many occasions, the author was grasping at something to throw in just to complete a specific scenario.There is a lot of redundancy in repeating what has already been stated and established.  The author must be in love with the word "MULTICAM", for it is waaaay overused and really became a nuisance word.  One thing the author really, really needs to learn is how to use a comma to break up the ludicrous run on words and run on sentences. It was truly distracting to have to stop and mentally figure out what the author was trying to convey.  The lack of proper punctuation and spelling, along with the lack of any kind of editing, are so severe that it tarnished what could have been a very enjoyable read.Many of the action scenarios are injected with what appeared to be "convenient" aspects, and were never brought to the forefront prior to their use.  For example:  Quarter sticks of dynamite, mixed with nails, being used against the blue heads.  Prior to that point in the story, the reader doesn't even know Beacon has that `convenient' arsenal until it is "crunch time"...and then, like magic, he has exactly what he needs, just in the nick of time to thwart the enemy.  Meanwhile, the reader is very well aware of every gun, rifle and caliber of bullet Beacon carried.  There are others, but I'll not go into it.Many parts of this story are illogical and do not make any sense.  For instance, why would anyone, in a chaotic state, where one is constantly fighting for their life, carry a .22 caliber rifle as a defensive weapon, when they have a .308 Caliber M1A rifle?  That makes no sense whatsoever.  Yet, throughout this entire story, the author has given almost everyone a Ruger 10/22 rifle as his or her long-range sniping gun.  I was constantly rolling my eyes at the idiocy of this mindset.  The author seems to advocate in this story that a .22 caliber round is the most effective versatile bullet there is to take out over one hundred bad guys.  Do not be misled by this fallacy.The author would be wise to conduct some proof reading for spelling, and learn some basics about punctuation before he puts out any other stories.  Even at $2.99, (let alone, .99 cents) this story is not worth the effort of having to conduct your own proof reading, when it should have already been done.  It totally takes the joy out of reading.Yeah, I am fully aware of many who are willing to overlook these faults, and that's okay by me.  However, when people are paying hard-earned money for a product that does not perform, or provide the enjoyment expected, then the author's days are numbered and will not have much of a following.  I will not be reading anymore from this author, if this is the kind of product he is happy and satisfied with presenting to the public for monetary gain.BTW - the word is "planning", not "planing."  This is just one, among a myriad of other instances like this.  {roll eyes}  I mean, how hard is it to keep a dictionary close by...unless of course, it was all written out of plain ignorance in the first place.