Review: Really bad
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 25, 2014
I rarely give up at 16% into a book, but this was just too much. I suspected it was building up to nothing but a romance novel, but that was not the worst of it. I like a well-written romance novel, even when it's formulaic. But this was just badly written. Almost every paragraph included a sentence that made no sense, and in general the writing seems as if it was translated from an alien language by someone who doesn't know English very well. I'd rather not get specific in reviews like this, but here are a few examples:"Cahal muttered, his voice traveling loudly, which meant he was probably shouting." No ... he could have been shouting, but instead he was muttering. You just said that."[a quote, doesn't matter what it was], Ezra stated gradually ... " Slowly. Not gradually."A spew of oaths erupted from King Kincaid -- not a surprising reaction with the fact that she had been under his roof multiple times." (a) Everybody in the book is a King or an Elder. That gets old. (b) Everybody spews, has a nervous breakdown every few minutes, etc. That gets REALLY old. (c) "with the fact that" should be "considering"."his lips lifted in a roughish grin" Roguish? Roughish is not a word."she was fortunate not to have cut herself. Yet." No ... there was no luck involved. She was incredibly childish, but not quite stupid enough to cut herself."I was now higher than a kite from the cocktail the suddenly confused Mage had given me, who was completely unaware of the procedure he had just performed." The clause at the end -- "who was completely unaware ..." grammatically goes with "me", but that's not what the author meant."Staring at his action as I put my boots on ..." Staring at his action? Staring at HIM makes a lot more sense, but better yet just leave out that clause. It adds nothing.I could list examples all day.