Review: I hate to be critical but...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 14, 2013
This appears to be a debut book and I'd like to be more encouraging but I'd rather be honest. I truly wish that the author had gotten a ruthless editor to go over this book. If she self-published then she should have asked for some feedback from friends. The premise of the story is pretty good in that the H sees the h years ago and falls in love with her. He meets up with her years later and decides that his initial feelings as a boy were correct. He is a wealthy tradesman and the h is a noblewoman and should therefore be out of his reach. The h's dad is a gambler and is in financial difficulty so the H bails him out in return for getting the h as his wife. There are some side-stories involving friends of the H as well as the h's horrible sister. There are all the right ingredients for an interesting story.My issues with the book are as follows:1) The grammar is shocking and I'm no purist. The mixed tenses throughout the book were so bad that I wanted to throw my Kindle often. In some places it appears that some editing has been done but it's inconsistent and off-putting.2) It's too long by a third at least and it felt like the book was never going to end at times.3) We read of the feelings of the H and h, for page after page after page so many times throughout the book. It really isn't necessary and is completely redundant. The author would've done well to let us 'see' what was happening rather than continually tell us.+++Spoiler+++4) What got on my nerves was the h and her not wanting to trust the H with her heart. He tells her from the beginning that he loves her but she doesn't believe him. He goes out of his way to treat her wonderfully but she keeps worrying (page after page after page) that he will hurt her because he is only marrying her for her title. There is no foundation for her beliefs and she knew very well that marriages were arranged for money in those times, why should she be so offended?I really hope that the author gets an editor before publishing another book. The price of this book is good but I wouldn't read another unless she fixed some of the issues I mentioned above.