Review: Invisible Husband
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 2, 2010
PLOT: The first time Tammy and Eric meet in a bar it's the day he's been stood up at the altar and she's just learned that her college sweetheart is engaged to another woman. They meet again three years later on the aniversary of that day. Her sweetheart is marrying another woman at the same church where Eric's wedding was planned. Eric is there once again to see if his bride-to-be will show up. Eric asks her to marry him.PROS: The length is good. I liked the plot idea. The writing begins with potential. Eric was likeable.CONS: The main con is that it's unrealistic. It's three years after their initial meeting and neither of them has moved on? It's unbelievable at best and pathetic at worse. And it's an amazing coincidence that Marcus, Tammy's ex is getting married on the same day and at the same church that Eric had planned to marry Maria. I found Tammy's family to be unbelievable, violent, and unlikeable. I think they were supposed to be funny. Beating Eric with a shoe and a pan at a restaurant because Tammy eloped with him is not funny. Months pass before Eric and Tammy tell their families that they married.The author did a poor job of communicating the passage of time. Soon after they've married, time jumps forward to months later. Soon a year has passed.There were some vague areas. Like did Tammy have a job? What was Eric's job?The author is guilty of head hopping within a section. She'd start off in Eric's head and end up speaking from Tammy's point of view.This story could afford to be proofread. There were just a few errors and misused words. But some of the phrasing was odd enough that I wondered if English was the author's first language. There were some passages that I had to read a second time carefully just to understand the meaning.Tammy was too weak to like. She cowered to everyone, her mother, her half-sister, her half-sister's mother, etc. She actually fainted after seeing Eric's ex.2.5 STARS: I really wanted to like this story, but I was very disappointed with the tale beyond the initial sample.