Review: Decent Read - Decent Story
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 11, 2011
Dear. Ms. Daniels,I had the opportunity to review your upcoming ebook, Protective Custody. Imagine my surprise when I realized that I'd read a short erotic story you'd written only a week or so earlier. So I was pretty excited to give Protective Custody a shot, as I had enjoyed the short story.The premise of Protective Custody actually sounded, well, a bit boring.Witness to a murder, but no one will believe her...Shocked by the brutal crime she witnesses through the window of her small office, Megan Jackson calls the police and is devastated when they question the truth of her story. With no body and no evidence of a crime, she's written off as a nutcase.Megan suspects the killer saw her face. Terrified, she calls the only person she can trust-her ex-boyfriend and former police officer, Will McCoy.Despite a devastating breakup, Will jumps at the chance to help the woman who broke his heart. When the killer ramps up the stakes, Will is forced to take her into hiding-where the passion they once shared reignites, deeper and hotter than ever. But can Will keep Megan alive long enough to win back her heart?She saw a murder, her ex boyfriend is the only one she can think of to help her - blah blah blah. Been there, done that.One of the things that I most enjoy about reviewing books is when I'm made to eat my own words, and this time, I was.PROS: The characters were great, as was the interracial part of their relationship. There wasn't really any mystery, but there was a decent story, for which I was grateful to enjoy.CONS: The characters. While some characters, like Megan and Will's "boss" Ed, were great, Will himself needed work. He definitely seemed a bit "pussy whipped", and I didn't like that about him. I wanted him to be a lot stronger of a character than he actually was.While I enjoyed this story, there was much more that could have been done to make it better. I definitely think you have promise as a writer, Ms. Daniels, but I also think that you could do much better than you did. There are a few things missing from this story - a bit more action, a bit more adventure, and you would have a best seller.