Review: OK but needs correcting
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 16, 2014
I haven’t offered to review many stories in this genre but it appears to be fairly standard fare and shouldn’t disappoint those after a little pleasantly titillating erotica. It does have its share of faults, though. Throughout there are numerous small proof corrections needed; on the whole my eye skimmed over them without too much of a problem as the story was rattling along at a good pace. The MCs are not very well developed but likeable enough. Unfortunately it was let down by the final scene, an orgy which, to my mind, was out of step with the previously considerate approach Max had taken with Sasha. In my opinion several hours of servicing so many men would not be the fun the author would have us believe Sasha found it; it left me with an impression of something sordid and distasteful, which is a shame as I’d quite enjoyed it up to that point. I had been considering a rating of 3.5 rounded up to 4, but in the end rounded it down to 3 because of this, my decision bolstered by the constant flip-flopping of point of view. I’ll happily accept a change of POV within a chapter – I often do that in my own stories – but frequently changing POV within a paragraph is going too far.