Review: Needs lots of editing
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 9, 2012
It's not my favorite fantasy read and it'd probably be much better with lots of editing. Very hard to follow as it's so overwritten. Adverbs abound. Shoulders aren't just muscled they're lumpily muscled shoulders. "Aglow in the bright radiance of the system's young yellow sun, Level One was the shining face the Alliance presented to the galaxy." "was hanging from a strut overhead by his long arms, impatiently digging his huge fingers into the support hard enough to dimple the metal." "The underlying shape, however, was almost invisible under a multitude of sensor spars, invaluable in scanning for salvage." "She hurried furtively down the street, scanning side to side through the shadows." "There was blessed release in that gun, in the cold heart of the man who wielded it."