Review: unfortunately needs an editor
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 10, 2013
I was disappointed by the quality of the writing in this book. The story was nice, if a little predictable. But the writing prevented me from enjoying it. I know that not everyone is as finicky about writing as I am, so I'll detail my complaints and you can decide for yourself.Overall I found the style to be awkward and stiff, particularly but not limited to, the dialog. One of the things that bothered me was the lack of contractions in the dialog. People who grow up speaking English use a lot of contractions. The lack of them meant the dialog didn't feel natural. The sentence structure just didn't flow for me.There were a significant number of incorrect words, typos and scrambled idioms. Indefinite instead of infinite. Penetration instead of penetrating. Reminder instead of remainder. Pernickety instead of Persnickety. From her revelry instead of from her reverie. This is a small sampling of what I noticed.Finally, I found the reactions of the main character to be overly emotional. She didn't get upset, she got furious. She wasn't unhappy she was devastated. The level of emotion didn't match the seriousness of the incident causing it. It made her seem silly when she really wasn't and I just couldn't empathize with her at all.A good editor could guide this author into a smoother style of writing. I would highly recommend it.