Review: Decent Time Pass, But Lacks Zing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 18, 2013
This short is a decent time pass.  The writing isn't bad, but the storytelling needs work.Juliet is hungry and tries to steal some food from a group of men.  While running away after nearly being caught she runs into Wolf, leader of the men she was running from.  From there we go to ooh ah and aren't we just perfect together.  She is untrusting and lies.  He is frustrated with her doubts about him.  However, all of that floats away when they are indulging in passion.I found the writing style for the most part to be pleasant, however, for a book of this time period having the cli+++++ word thrown in was jarring and not very time appropriate.As for the storytelling I had no problem with her sleeping with him the first night they meet, she was hungry, he had food, he was handsome why not.  I could even stretch it to him wanting her to hang around and dilly dally some more, what I had issue with was that they both seemed to want a fairytale ending so quickly.The other element I had problems with was coincidence....as this is a short story I won't go into detail, but there are too many of them for my liking.Normally when I read a short I want one big emotion at the end.  Even with a light romantic erotica story I want to feel.  This unfortunately just passed the time and left me saying to myself "that ended abruptly".  Perhaps if I had read the other two previous stories I might not have felt lost in the universe, but as a stand alone story this did not give me enough insight into the characters of the H/h to make me root for them to end up together.  I actually kept thinking it would have read better as a one night stand.Once again it's not a bad time pass, but it's not a great time pass either.