Review: Too disjointed for me to really see reading the next part
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 15, 2013
This is only my opinion as a reader.  I'm not skilled enough to be a writer and I'm not criticizing the writer personally.  I think there must be more to what she wrote, I just couldn't see it.  I wasn't turned off by the writing itself, and didn't find any glaring errors.  It was just disjointed.Marissa has potential, she's a bit indecisive and her inner dialog is annoying, but then seeing how her mother is an absolute monster and how no one in her family takes her side (typical abusive family dynamics, they're all afraid to defend her for fear of ending up in mom's sites).  Plus her boyfriend, obviously was attached to her, though you weren't sure why since he criticized her, sided with her mother constantly, and then cheated on her, but still was hanging on for about 4 months.Xander seems odd and creepy stalkerish tendencies.  He could very well be a nice guy, but you really don't get enough of his personality to know for sure.  Asking for her panties and telling her what he wanted to do with her sexually, creeping her out, causing her to hang up on him and then showing up at her b&b;? The verdict is out on Xander.  And the weird and weirder phone conversations.  Based on what he said, I'd think he was some kind of sex fiend and be worried about gifts that keep on giving like herpes.The story feels out of context.  I know that it's part of a series, but there wasn't really anything to draw you in and make you want to find out what happens.  I felt sorry for Marissa, was grossed out by Xander and disgusted by her entire past life.  I think if the next part ties it all together for the reader then it should be re-released as one story so that you don't feel so out of sync.