Review: Cute story but needs editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 12, 2014
The story is nice but sometimes it's hard to follow or just very distracting with the editing issues. For example, in one scene the characters are one brother and Emmy and then all of a sudden they mention Jade and Marie, which can't be, since Marie is hours away and Jade is in the barn. Then another scene, Sara and Jade go on a date and she is wearing a pretty sundress but ends the date in jeans and t-shirt. This is on top of grammar issues (using "to" instead of "too" just to name one.) Also, Jade is sometimes called JT, but this is never explained. You have to finally figure out that they are the same person. It was confusing. The story was a bit simplistic in some areas, not always believable, but it did hold my interest and wasn't boring.