Review: Mr. Allen needs to go back to writing school
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 10 16, 2013
I bought this novella expecting a good story; but Mr. Allen's style of writing dashed those hopes.The most basic rule of writing taught to novice writers is "Show is don't tell me." After I read several chapters of pure narrative summary and back story (telling) with no dialog, action or internal thoughts (showing) I was forced to conclude that Mr. Allen wasn't ready for publication yet.I suspect that if Jay wrote out the action, dialog etc. to show us the story he would have had a novel length work. Unfortunately I found the same lack of readable style in the first novel in His series. I will not be buying any more of his novelization.