Review: Really awful (very, very slight spoilers ... of the first 5% of the book)
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 04 5, 2014
I only made it 5% into this series until I had to put it down. First, the story was just too far fetched and ridiculous - a meddling father, who is also a successful business man, who sends his secretary to his son's house in a snow storm with a completely trumped up story of needing papers that were delivered to the office after he left? Which he told her about as he was leaving the office? Come on.But what really got to me was the lack of editing - incorrect words used, either incorrect grammar, extra words or just the wrong word, as well as the general writing. For example: "Beside the fact that Lucas had pretty much removed himself from the normal life as much as possible," "William Montgomery did not get to be a financial success that he was," "Tell her to let me know when she wants them for and I'll be sure to get them to her," "It would be wonderful if the courier arrived within the next couple of hours so that she could be leave the office by two," "No words could have taken the wind out of his sales," "he would be in treatment longer that anticipated," "went off the narrow path of his driveway and into the to ravine below," etc. etc.Then there are the descriptions of Lucas' "feelings." Emma, who he has barely spoken to for the two years she's been in his father's employ, bumps her head when her car goes off the road and passes out, and " She wasn't moving and that was killing him." Killing him??? Then when she wakes up and says she hurts all over, his response is "That's my girl." What? At this point in the book, there has simply not been enough character development to know how Lucas feels that this comment sounds anywhere close to plausible. Then Emma "whined." And then, when Emma said she'd be fine and didn't need Lucas waiting on her, "Lucas' face was a portrait of barely concealed rage." Really??? Barely concealed rage because she won't play the damsel in distress and let him wait on her??Ridiculous, juvenile, poorly written and even more poorly edited. That did it for me and I put the series down.Disappointing, because I've read other books by this author that I enjoyed ("The Snowflake Inn" comes to mind as one example).