Review: Great Book, but needs major editing. Please, please someone -- anyone -- find this author and editor!
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 09 15, 2013
I loved this story, but I had to take off one star for lousy editing.Set on a world "far, far away," the characters were richly appealing in their simplicity and complexity: Unprotected, single women from Earth are kidnapped by a race of warrior men to the Tornian Empire where the Tornian females are outnumbered 200 to 1. The first woman was actually kidnapped by a different race of scavengers and then rescued by the Tornian Emperor, who falls in love with her because she is so different from the cold, uncaring females of the empire, but this is NOT her story. It is the story of the raiders sent to Earth by the Tornian Council to obtain more Earth women for the elite warriors of the upper echelons -- the lords, council members and others of high rank.Along with the story of Lisa Miller and King Grim, there are asides into the lives of others who will no doubt be in their own books very soon.BUT!The story editing must improve a lot or some readers will be turned off by the annoying and outright aggravating lack of simple editing.The past, present and future tenses need corralling -- most books are written about something that "happened" to a character or characters. It is in the past... tense needs to stay in the past. The story started out in the past tense, but sometimes dropped into the present -- "Grim looks at her and can see her sadness." = should be "Grim looked at her and could see her sadness." or "... saw her sadness." depending on the time frame.Way too many "THENs" that need to be "THANs"  and vice versa, "what" that should be "want", "chocks" that should be "chokes", etc. -- and other words that were spelled correctly, but were the WRONG words by definition.So, please, I beg you, find someone to help with the editing and, for the sake of future sales and readers, re-edit this book and re-submit it...