Review: Had a very hard time finishing it
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 22, 2012
Warning: This review might contain what some people consider SPOILERS.Rating: 4/10PROS:- The idea of an "Omega Network," through which abused omega wolves can obtain help escaping from their packs, is interesting.- Dewey's partner, Taggart, is tough and sweet and über-protective.- I thought it was cute seeing Dewey's innocent confusion as he discovers technology and shopping malls and other modern conveniences that he's never had access to before.CONS:- The foursome didn't work for me. I believed in Dewey's attachment to Taggart, but the other two seemed to be tacked on for the sake of hotness. (The sad thing is that I didn't find any of the bedroom scenes hot.)- The writing here is almost entirely telling (as opposed to showing). For example: "...he was a sadistic son of a [gun] who liked things that made my skin crawl. His idea of normal was so [effed] up." But then we never see what these "things" are that make Dewey's skin crawl. We just have to take his word for it that the other guy is a creep. Even the sex scenes barely show anything: "Then, as if he hadn't done enough, he swallowed down my [you-know-what] and rocked my world with the best [bj] ever."- Flynn's phrasing is awkward and sounds unnatural much of the time. "He was on the edge of control to not tear out Ryan's throat"; "I figured everyone would cut me a little slack since what was going on."- Just about every action related throughout the story is exaggerated by at least 50%. The melodrama had me rolling my eyes by the second page, gritting my teeth by the second chapter, and contemplating abandonment by a third of the way through.Overall comments: I hate to use the word "amateurish," but I honestly feel that it's the best adjective for this story. The language is strange, the writing is disjointed, and the story doesn't delve into the characters' heads in any depth at all. Add to that the over-the-top descriptions, and it simply wasn't a winner for me. There's also a pretty serious Chick with Brick angle to the story (Dewey's 5'2" and wears clothing that he acknowledges is feminine, whereas his lovers are all at least 6'7" and incredibly macho), which I don't mind in the least, but I know some readers hate it.