Review: Badly In Need of Character & Relationship Development, and World Building
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 2, 2012
For His Pleasure by Kelly Favor follows a naive college graduate seeking an internship at an advertising agency.  When, against all odds, 22 year old Nicole Masters actually land the job, and personally informed over the phone by the rich, young owner Red Jameson to boot, the young intern gets a lot more than she bargained for.The author tries to make young Nicole someone the readership can identify and sympathize with: young, vulnerable, naive, and eager to please.  However, she fails to make Jameson equally identifiable with her readership.  he comes off as aloof, controlling, moody, egotistic, and it stretches the bounds of credibility to suggest that a worldly, sophisticated man like Jameson would have any interest in the young intern.  Indeed, kelly Favor fails to explain the attention Jameson feels towards Nicole; instead, all I see is a young girl who is easily bullied and dominated to his whim.  I just don't feel the author has spent enough time developing these characters, and their revolving relationship, and I deducted one star off my rating for this reason.The second issue is what I call world building.  The author names New York City as the location for this story.  Yet, there is little mention of the sights and sounds of the city, or the crowds, or anything to suggest this takes place in the Big Apple.  From the lack of inconvenience in travel arrangements, I would have thought the location for this story is a Hoboken, New Jersey, or a Greenwich, Connecticut, for example.  There is no mention of the glitz and glitter of a New York City backdrop.  I deducted another story strictly for this reason.For His Pleasure by Kelly Favor focuses on getting Nicole Masters into the company, and from there into Red Jameson's pants.  Some readers may be satisfied with that.  I tend to set my bar a little higher.