Review: Not believable
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 05 25, 2013
I truly hate to have to give a bad review. Lois is a headache that needs to be hospitalized. Her fears are not to be ignored, but she is too foolish, too cowardly to stick around and fight, thus the reader is left with the feeling it is all Tom's fault when it is hers. Characters like her are not responsible enough for Bdsm. The writer needs to learn subject verb agreement. Using the word seen when she should be using saw is poor writing. There was a scene where Tom and Lois were together then the next paragraph we read Lois is out with Mark and he is proposing to Laura. There are other places where the story goes wrong. The week with Jade wasn't believable. Neither was how she found the ranch. Lois' stalker, Alex is brought in. He obviously is one reason she's nutcase, but then he's never heard from again. Book is too long. Work on writing a tighter story.