Review: Could have been better
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 08 4, 2013
To me this story was sadly lacking in many ways. I don't know if it's the author's first attempt at writing, but it sure felt like it. A sad lack of dialogue, and what little there was, was dry and wooden. Carol Anne, even as plus sizes woman myself, I had no empathy for her. She came across as a Too Stupid To Live, twit. As for the Hero, well he wasn't far behind her. Large plot holes, and a lot of, what-the-heck-is-going-on, moments had me bemused.An attempt at humour also had me rolling my eyes heavenward.With some better effort, and less telling and more showing, this story could have been a lot better.