Review: Very well written but didn't fully immerse me
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 05 31, 2011
After his wife's death, all of Vincent's love and devotion goes to his daughter; he would do anything and fight anyone to keep her safe.  As it turns out, he will have to do unimaginable things to protect her life."Beyond the Veil" is a short story that discusses two different worlds.  The first world is simply the world we all live in where humans go about their daily lives.  The second world is where we go when we die, the place where we prepare for our reincarnation (don't worry, it won't push any religion on you).  Vincent will have to venture into this second world in order to learn how to save his daughter.The author's writing style was, for the most part, very good.  At the end, it became a bit chaotic and difficult to understand everything that was happening, but otherwise everything is explained well and developed extremely well for a short story.Despite the development, I still just didn't fully become engrossed in the story; had it been a full length novel, I would have easily become distracted.  I'm not entirely sure why this was since the story is very strong in plot and development, but I can only guess that it was because it was a bit predictable.  It was a very original story, don't get me wrong, but I just found myself guessing correctly what was ahead; there were no twists or turns, which some people will probably appreciate greatly.Overall, I just want to say that I highly recommend downloading this short story.  It's not perfect, but it's definitely very close!  It's quite an excellent short fantasy read that I think most will enjoy.