Review: Has the basis for a good story, but really needs a good editor
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 5, 2014
I cannot honestly recommend this book, because in reading it, there were simply too many spelling, grammatical and formatting errors for me not to comment on them. They were really distracting: for example, one character's name in this book is "Nuke," and yet, the entire story alternates between calling him "nuke" in the lower case...or using "Nuke" starting in upper case. I honestly lost track of the times it switched around. As another example, the story is littered with quotation marks that are facing in the wrong direction, and the in-between sections were not properly formatted and inconsistent. There are also many words that are misspelled or left out of a sentence entirely.In other words, the book really would benefit from a good editor and proofreader. This is not necessarily something that the author can do, frankly, but it would really have helped to improve my enjoyment of the novel.Other than that, the author has chosen to craft an intricate plot, and I commend her for that. She breaks up the chapters so that they are told through the eyes of different characters, which is clever. That said, there were a few chapters that felt unnecessary, because we had been told the exact same thing in the chapter before, only from the eyes of another character. Some judicious cutting so that the different POVs are helping to advance the plot, not go over what we already know, would really help to move the story along faster.The main character is extremely pleasant and I think that the author has a solid premise here. She has a good eye for military intrigue. A few more drafts (and a good editor) would really make this book shine, and I look forward to seeing what Nihar has to offer in the future.