Review: Um...well...no
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 30, 2012
Okay. It was short. That helps. I read it in about 30 minutes. The grammar was horrible,and there were typos where the main character's name changed from paragraph to paragraph. Not sure if it was the way it was submitted or the way the software rendered it, but even the most basic rules of grammar weren't adhered to. Lack of proper paragraph indentation, quotes not punctuated properly, the list goes on. I found it distracting to the point of not being able to enjoy what story there was. It seemed to deal a little too much in stereotypes for my tastes. It is possible to write this character with out falling into every 'Hood rats act like this' expectation known to man. The husband was decently developed, though he fell into the 'Stopped being Black enough when he got some success' slot. The brother, well damn. Another caricature. Ms. Jackson seems capable of writing good, gritty, urban erotica. I hope she gets the basics taken care of, and improves. Liked the ending, the hot scenes were good, just a lot of little things brought it down.