Review: Good story, bad editing.
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 07 23, 2014
This was my first time reading a story by this author and I did enjoy it. The characters were fun, the storyline was exciting, funny and sexy, but most of all I love Terrence and Dana as a couple. Their relationship starts out unconventionally but they try to make a go of it. Unfortunately not everyone is looking out for their best interest. Like I said, the story itself was enjoyable, quick, but enjoyable. My only problems are, this had the potential to be sexy as hell but the love scenes were glossed over. Only the last one had a start and completion. As sexy as my boy Terrence was, come on. Also the lack of editing took away from the flow of the story. It wasn't so bad at first but towards the end it got worse. Lastly, at times it took me a minute to figure out who was speaking. It switched from them speaking in first person within their chapter to the other character speaking (I'm confused trying to explain it). Overall IMO with some minor tweaking this would have been 5 stars and I'm for sure waiting for part II.