Review: A Bloody Business
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 26, 2014
This is an interesting story. A whodunit with pretty women, great looking smart dedicated men, murder aplenty, mystery, and a whole lot of back biting. It could be a very good tale.The reason I used the word could is because this book has so many errors. I don't mean a couple, as I tend to overlook them in books where they are relatively few and far between. However this book has dozens.Some errors are the use of incorrect words such as when Sam meets Jared and we are told  she felt a "tinkle" in her stomach. I believe she meant tingle as the other word usually means something quite different. There is also the time Samantha is  informed that an executioner is looking at her best friend's will. That would be an executor. She once uses the word lounged instead of lunged. These types of errors occur time after time.Some of the writing is strange. For example, she writes "he looked at me with sweet and comprehensive eyes", "Jared remained quiet as more tears left my eyes", and "...looking at Jared with anger in my eyes.". These descriptions occur in just four consecutive paragraphs. There are numerous references to eyes in the story. It got to be very distracting.Subject and verb agreement, past and present tense, and other errors also made reading difficult. I am not an English teacher and I do not make a habit whipping out a red pen (literally or figuratively) but when there are this many problems it distracts from the story.I truly believe this author has talent and she obviously has the drive to get her work out there. What she lacks is editing and proofreading. I realize that professional editing for a new author might be prohibitively expensive and would therefore urge her to tap into others who are readers. I've found that people who genuinely love reading are more often than not happy to help new authors become successful. While they may not be perfect they can often catch the majority of errors.