Review: Good premise, but needs some work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 14, 2011
This is a cute short story, and worth the read as a freebie.  I liked the world-building and the main storyline.  But the characters aren't internally consistent.  Selina is presented as an intelligent, independent 19 year old - who somehow takes half the story to reach a conclusion that was obvious to the reader much earlier on.The grammar isn't bad enough that it kept me from enjoying the story, and is better than most self-published stories.  But it still could benefit from some cleanup.I'd read another book by the same author, but I wouldn't necessarily be willing to pay for it.