Review: Could be better
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 30, 2013
Two stars for effort. Loss of stars due to lack of originality, poor flow, character and plot development and lastly too many errors. On a positive note the story was okay enough to continue reading and definitely has the potential to be better. It wouldn't hurt to pull this and allow it to be rewritten and then republished so that its more enjoyable.