Review: Poor grammer, misspellings, repitition
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 26, 2014
This might be a good story if only . . .  The author uses "I" almost all the time when "me" would be proper grammer.  One of my pet peeves.  There are also misspellings such as "Least" for "lest".  Could have been a decent story but I couldn't get past the constant use of "I".  Sometimes the characters go over the same things multiple times.  Maybe this was meant to represent the characters being elder and having memory issues.  There are also a number of times when it is unclear which character is doing what.  Things of the type such as, "El and I drove to her house, and came out dressed in a yellow sun dress."  This isn't an exact quote, but gets the idea across.  Who came out in the sun dress?  One character had just showered and changed clothes, then they drove to El's house.  Did this character change clothes again?  Or did El?