Review: It is a 99 story
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 26, 2013
It's not a bad story; not at all.  With some work, it might actually become a very good story.  But it's not ready for Amazon prime time - that's painfully obvious.  For something so short, the almost complete lack of editing, poor grammar, spelling and syntax errors were almost overpowering; they certainly detracted from my attempt to actually enjoy the story.I found myself thinking, "I really don't need to see the words "wife and infant" again for at least several paragraphs."  Combined with obvious mistakes like contraction errors ("your" instead of "you're"), run on sentences that had both commas (",") and conjunctions (",but,") and spelling errors than any spell-checker should have / would have caught, I found by about page 25 or so I was just looking to the finish while skimming the remaining 14 pages.  Unfortunately, any enjoyment of the story was long gone by then.I think I'd actually give the story - premise and treatment - maybe a 3 or 4 star rating... I'd give the editing and grammar a negative 1 or 2 stars if that were possible.  If the author were to find a good editor and re-work it, this could be a pretty good story; maybe even a good book if the first three were combined into one volume.  As it stands, I'm going to have to think before enduring the next two installments.