Review: Great idea, good story, major editing needed.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 1, 2014
This was a great premise by the author, exceptionally good story telling and nice mix of humour thrown in for good measure.The writing style though....it seriously needs an editor. The nicest thing I can say about the style without being nasty about it is that it's got a very amateur style. Give the author time and experience and I'm sure this will improve.The foundations are there; brilliant story, great ideas - just some improvement on the writing style and this author is seriously going places!