Review: Sweet Story - Lots of Grammar Issues - Not Enough Dialogue
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 18, 2014
First of all, let me state that I enjoyed reading a story set during a time period where our magnificent hero came from a group considered to be on the fringe of London society.  Even though tradesmen were often very wealthy, lived and enjoyed a great quality of life, they "worked" for crying out loud!  Yes, our Main Guy - Graham Descantes is a tradesman.**Spoilers**I also loved the fact that for a change, we have a mature heroine in Lady Jane and an absolutely steadfast hero in Graham Descantes who was a virgin of all things - imagine that!  We rarely come across male virgins in this genre and I love it when an author is bold enough to give us one.  Kudos to KM Shropshire for giving us some great characters in this book.My issues with the book have been mentioned in at least one other review.  There were too many pages without dialogue - just pages of mostly thoughts and feelings of the characters.  In my experience, most writers find a way to weave the thoughts and feelings of their subjects into the story-line by using creative dialogue.  Not that there isn't a place for descriptions and feelings without dialogue but I was a little dumbfounded  with how much of the book was taken up by simply "telling" the thoughts and feelings of the H/h with little use of dialogue.  Also, much of the dialogue was plain, a little stilted and not so creative.For the record, I rarely mention grammatical issues - this genre is rife with poor grammar.  However, I truly hope the author reads my review because I must point out the misuse of the word "all ready" vs "already" - please read up on this and get it right.  This book used the words "all ready" in many, many places that actually needed the word "already."  Also, there were lots of missing words in the book which left the reader attempting to fill in the blanks. I hereby volunteer to edit KM Shropshire's next book.I rarely write a 3 star review.  Most of my reviews are written because I loved the book or I strongly disliked the book's story-line. However, since it's possible this is KM Shropshire's first novel, I wanted to try and encourage this author to continue writing.It is my belief the author has set us up for more in this series and perhaps there will be a forthcoming book about Lucian and Jemima.  I am rooting for what I hope will be a romance between the two of them - sure to sizzle since their personas are not going to go quietly into a relationship.  I also foresee more trouble on the horizon with Lord Gorden and Sophia - hateful little witch that she is.KM Shropshire - May I suggest that you find an editor or at least a good proofreader and work on getting the dialogue to do the job without so many "dialogue-free" paragraphs.  I look forward to more books!!