Review: Motto: quit while you're ahead
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 21, 2013
Beware, there be spoilers here. I'll warn you before I get into them.I had read this story in its online incarnation and found it to be fairly charming, so was happy to see it out for kindle. The courtship of Carmen and Clancy was sweet and amusing. The added content for what forms the basis of the original story was nice, but I found the additional content (basically the last third of the book) to detract from the rest of the story.Spoilers below:I had hoped if the story was being re-done that they would remove the 'slap' scene in the bathroom. It was unnecessary and contrived plus I don't like any kind of violence between protagonists. Then this version adds a pretty ridiculous plot line involving a church buying up gay and lesbian clubs (not saying it couldn't happen, just that the way it's done here wasn't great). The entire plot line grated, especially because it turned Carmen, who up until this point was a level headed, considerate woman, into an antagonisitic twit. The two scenes that took place in the lesbian den of depravity and the gay bar were also over the top and added nothing to the story.I'm glad I got to read the additional version of the original storyline, but if I ever re-read this I'll stop where the old story finished and forget the rest.