Review: Interesting story told in multiple single person POVs but needs editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 8, 2014
This book is the conclusion to 30 Days and unfortunately it had the same issues as the first book. It needs major editing. Unlike the first book where it jumps from present to past this one jumps from one character's point of view to another. Fortunately, Larsen let's you know it's happening by labeling the chapters with the name of the character. In other words, when we are in Elle's POV the chapter heading is Elle, when in Colin's the chapter heading is Colin and so on. Larsen does a very good job of sticking strictly to that character's POV while in that character but I am not a fan of first person POV stories. The story is tied up in a nice bow at the end but there are unbelievable scenes such as the climax when Elle and Ryan face off and when Elle is in the hospital and after she gets home. A little research on the types of injuries Elle sustained, self-defense, battered/abused women syndrome and other topics would have made this a really good story, unfortunately, it sorted of read like a man wrote it and couldn't identify with what happens to a woman when she is abused and what gaining control of her life does to repair a woman's psyche. There are also issues with the final fight scene that were frankly unbelievable.As stated above the same jargon, slang, and editing problems from the fist book can be found in this one as well. My suggestion for the first book holds true for this one, get an editor and submit a new version. A beta team would be very helpful too.Final opinion: If you are looking for an intriguing story then by all means grab 30 Days and Committed but don't expect a professionally edited book. If you have quirks or hang-ups on books not being edited properly, a lack of research, slang/jargon, and misspellings then seriously skip both titles.Overall opinion: Having stated the above and my review on 30 Days, I will be keeping an eye on Larsen and hope she develops her craft. If I was the author I would polish it up and submit a new version for the fans that really enjoyed the book. I would also lower the price or make it free until the issues were addressed and corrected. I'm not as picky as some readers so I stuck with the story but if you are looking for or need a professionally polished book I would seriously suggest you find something else to read.