Review: Could have been good.
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 05 15, 2012
This could have been a very good story if only the author didn't change voice after chapter 5.  It sort of all went to hell when Quinn adopted the use of the word 'baby' at the drop of a hat.  That and Nathan's darker side and their ridiculous talking during sex - lots of words being said during heavy breathing - removed any believability from the story and made it read like some quick write just to throw some things together and get off.  This is the second Mercy Celeste book I've read and while I appreciate her fast-past and story-lines with a twist, I don't understand how she can get her male characters voices so wrong.  They don't ring true. The story read like it was written by 2 different authors.  Up to the end of chapter 5 was on par and excellent.  The description were very good and the writing neat.  After that, it just unraveled.  I see the author spending quite a bit of time at the front and then not being too sure about the rest.  And there's no need to dump all that much in a story that's really a novella or a long short story.  It's okay to have one focus. I would love to see this story fleshed out some more - maybe 4 times the length and the character's voices fixed.  Then it would be a five star read.I'm beginning to think that kindle samples should come from the middle of the stories or random selections because too many writers work hard to perfect the beginning while caring very little for the remainder of the story.