Review: Began okay, but devolved into 'Vinegar for the Bored'
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 09 15, 2013
I thought the story had a lot of promise from the summary I read, but after the first chapter, I realized it was overly described pape. I finished the book, because I felt I had to since I spent $2.99 for 130 pages of drivel.Here are my observations:• Too must "flowery" language in the descriptions -- It felt more like a historical romance accidentally transported into modern day.• Intimate scene between the two main characters was trite and annoying instead of heated and passionate. It's okay to use words like erection, clit, core muscles, vaginal muscles and others to describe the intimate relations and still not end up sounding -- or reading -- as crude or crass.• Adverbs and adjectives that made no sense describing the scene or interaction between the two main characters -- the one that really stood out for me was "raspberried bud"  which would have been better described as "sensitive bud" since "raspberried" is more of a visual cue, not something felt by the character while reading from that character's point of view.• Poor editing - Words like "then" where it should be "than", "lie" that should be "lay" and simple mistakes, like "the" in place of "that".• A very poor ending. As I read the ending, I wanted to throw my book on the floor, but since it was an e-book, I decided that destroying my iPad little over the top as a reaction.Overall, I really, really had to struggle to finish this book. My husband kept asking me what I was complaining about every few minutes, out loud, while I was reading it, and I told him, "'Cause I spent 3 bucks on it, that's why!"However, I gave it 2 stars and not 1 for this reason: If the author could cut the "crap" and follow the story line to a more satifying conclusion, I think one day she could be a successful romance author. Also, find an editor, a friend or a reader that can help with the editing and story line.