Review: Author needs help
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 27, 2013
The story itself is sweet, interesting.  The characters have potential.But the author needs help.  Perhaps a remedial English class to start.  "Her and Ethan....."  "Me and him...."  All the shoes had "heals."  And that's only the tip of the iceberg.  The narrative shifts tense without rhyme or reason.  Some pages are written in the past tense, some in the present.  The POV shifts about as well.  In addition to the grammatical errors, there are spelling errors.  A good editor could do much with the manuscript, but I would urge this writer to work with a writer's group and also take a basic English class.The characters are given for the sequels, and there are potentially good stories to be told, so I wish this young author well.