Review: Interesting paranormal sci fi
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 13, 2013
Very interesting story that needed some polish and editing.  There were some instances of telling instead of showing.  Other than that the the cultural, family themes and and the use of Spanish language in parts of the story added a warmth that I really liked. A good editor would have found a way to add more of that into the story. I wish this story had more professional editing because this writer is truly talented.  I think the romantic relationship between Natalie and Ryan was a little overblown.  I understand why it was used the way it is being used in the story but a real editor would have helped the author polish it up better.