Review: This Author Really Could Do Better!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 09 14, 2012
This author has some good ideas in making a story about those mysterious creatures that live in the deep of the sea.  For the most part,  he has the stories organization arranged nicely that move the reader from one part to the next.The reader gets into the story and then hits a speed bump when the author uses wrong words that don't go with the thought.If the author is going to include people serving in the military,  such as the Coast Guard in this story,  he really needs to have some idea of the meaning of rank.  All the Coast Guard personnel from the Admiral to the guys doing the grunt work are called "Officers."  In the real world, the officers direct and the seamen and machinests, and petty officers see that the orders get carried out.If the author does more writing,  I believe that he is capable of putting across a thought without using God's name as a cuss word.  Many of his Christian readers can put up with lots of stuff, but it is a slap in the face when that kind of language assaults our momentum of reading.The author needs to realize that Anthropomorphism - the giving of animals human feelings and characteristics is way overdone in this book.  Calling a fish evil because he eats is not intelligent writing.  We kill to eat too, but we aren't evil when we do it.Again,  I think the author can develop storytelling skills to go with his organized mind and I'll look forward to future books.