Review: What a waste of time
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 01 12, 2013
I have 42 notes to myself on my kindle about various things wrong with this book.  They vary from punctuation errors, grammar errors, words used excessively, things that are just not believable (like one day to "seriously" clean out an apartment to move and get your deposit back)...there are SO many things in this book that make no sense--such as the sister of one of the main characters taking over running a bakery on a moments notice, even though she is not a baker---cooking and decorating cakes and such takes a lot of training and skills, you don't just walk in one day deciding to "pinch hit" for a few weeks or months.  So many things in the book just not believable.The characters have "wild sex" a week or two after she has her appendix out? Oh come on...does the author have any clue about surgery and how long it takes before you even want sex, let alone can endure the discomfort?It needs editing--serious editing.  Multiple grammar and punctuations errors throughout.  Many simple changes to sentences would have made a big difference. People don't say things like WTF in a sentence when they are talking to someone.The sex scenes are overly explicit, often using terms like "she licked his sex" if you are going to be explicit, then be explicit, don't dance around it with meaningless phrases ...better to let the reader use their imagination a bit...I don't need a blow by blow description of every single act they perform unless you are trying to produce a SMUT type book.  If it were not for the explicit sex scenes there would not be much else to this book, and I assume that is why the author gives you a second by second replay of their intimacy. There is not much else to this book.The characters are not believable based on the language...they are likeable, nice people, and I doubt they would use the kind of language used in this book...granted it is not used often, but it just does not "fit" with their characters.  Rule # 1 in writing...it has to be believable and the author violates this rule at every twist and turn.The plot is hackneyed.  Boy and girl know each other from high school, re-discover each other years later.  Have a rocky spot in their relationship.  Sister gets involved and helps them work out their difficulties...next thing you know they are running off to Vegas to get married...THEN story skips to 2 years later, 2 pages later the story is over. I guess the author was as tired of this book as I was and just could not figure out a way to end it or was tired of writing. Maybe married sex was not as exciting as single sex because basically that was all this book was about.While I have no problem with expletives, they should only be used when they are important to the story or the emotion. The few times expletives were used, they just did not fit the characters, and there was no need for it...it certainly added nothing to the sentence or the emotion...it was there just for the purpose of using an expletive.The writer (and I use that term very loosely) uses the same phrases over and over.  Get a thesaurus.  The author needs to expand their vocabulary.  If I read she ground herself into him one more time I think I would "upchuck".While not the worst book I have ever read, it comes darn close. This book really has no literary or other value whatsoever.  It  might fall under the category of chick lit...worthless drivel...too bad...I liked the characters, but there was nothing to the story.  The characters could have been developed a LOT more, the story could have had some twists and turns, it should have been more than boy meets girl and they get married (within a few months).  There was no development of their relationship, they just dropped into bed every time you turned around.If you enjoy a book that is little more than explicit sex scenes, one after another, then you might enjoy this.  There is no way, shape or form that this book can be considered good writing.  Between poor writing skills, lack of a decent plot (and a lot could have been done with this other than sex scene after sex scene---the main characters never seem to talk...they just have sex, over and over and over).I highly suggest the author take a course in grammar, punctuation and creative writing.Do not waste your time on this book unless you just have a couple of hours to spend on mindless "junk"...It could have been a good book, if it had been edited, and there was more to the plot than "they met, they fell in love and got married"...Don't waste your time...even at the price of free, it was not worth the time.  No redeeming value whatsoever.  I hope the author has not quit their day job.  They don't have a future in writing.