Review: Good, but needs work.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 22, 2012
This story has an interesting plot, but it needs another edit or rewrite to make it really good.  It's a very short story that is obviously going to lead into a series, but it falls into the trap of the "bad cut off".  Just when you think you are getting to the interesting part the book ends.  It's a problem that a lot of authors seem to be having lately, they forget that a book still needs a begining, middle and an end, even if it's part of a series.  I would suggest the author go back and edit to make the story have the proper setup.  This  girl has a vision about the end of the world and everyone just believes her.  They uproot their families and quit their jobs because a 12 year old kid "said so".  There really is no conflict in this book at all.  No problems to solve or obstacles to overcome.  It's very much like wish fulfillment on the part of the author, like she thought 'this is what I would do' and wrote it down.  That may make for a good story to tell aloud to a friend, but it makes for a pretty boring read, where no one has any problems getting what they need or doing what they want.  It's flat and the dialogue is often stilted as though it was written in a 'Let's get this over with" sort of way.Now, I'm not trying to be negative.  I just want to point out what I found problematic with the writing.  The idea for this book is good and I would like to know what happens, but I feel like so much could have, or should have happened here but didn't.  I won't be looking for the second book in this series unless there is some proof that the basic storytelling structure improves.