Review: Good fantasy yarn but needs editing.
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 03 30, 2014
I enjoyed the story line, the characters, and the fantasy world. The description of the world spoke to me through the senses as good writing does. The nitty-gritty details of writing need work. There is awkwardness in subject\verb agreement that needs resolution. Also, some tenses of the verbs aren't correct. In addition, the author needs to write for clarity and proof more.The use of slang doesn't always work, in my opinion, in this book. I LIKED the book...I read all of it. If I didn't think the author were talented, I wouldn't have gone to so much trouble here. I suggest the author read her writing out-loud as awkward writing falls badly on the ear. Best of luck and happy writing.