Review: Needs Some Editing to Make it Smoother.....
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 16, 2013
Characters: Dalia has a huge chip on her shoulder and Bron has a hard time winning her over despite their being mates.  There is a lot of involved African Tribal paranormal and mystical plottings going on, that leads Dalia to her mate Bron, him breaking through her trust issues, his losing her and their subsequent reconciliation.Writing Style: Not my favorite and was thankful it was Free. In the beginning, there is a lot of racial slang with calling each other "brotha" and rude sarcasm.  "So you just gonna ignore a brotha?"  "Really papi, does that work on these proper types you find in here?"  Then there are the abrupt scene changes and conversations.  I admit to skimming because of the dialogue and abrupt scene changes.Plot:This story had  a lot of potential but was interrupted by choppy writing and bad transitions.  Many times I was confused by change in scenery and abrupt endings to conversations.  The dialogue needed more attention as both characters came across somewhat snippy or vague at times.  It was hard to connect with them or see them as attracted to each other.  In the end, Dalia has the chance to kill the "bad guy" and Bron says he has to go and takes her hand and they leave.  Why?  I have no idea. Overall, it was just missing a good editor's touch.Sex and Violence Rating: R Descriptive Sex, No profanity, Killing3 Stars - It Had Good Parts, Would not buy sequel