Review: pretty contrived
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 13, 2012
Three guys who are buddies toss in on a dare.  One ups the ante a bit too much and tosses in a "tell" almost immediately for anyone used to reading thriller genre on a regular basis.  Thus, while not determing the exact specifics to getting there (though they were all pretty cliched), it was pretty obvious (to this reader) who was gonna be the baddie and pretty much the way things would end up - which they did.  There was too much contrived. Especially when Bill made the gross errors NO ONE really makes when doing this type of thing on line these days.There is a confusing bit in the writing that further gave away the potential plot. Andrew tells Bill that Dan has a new girlfriend.  Then (for some odd reason) Dan tells Drew to tell Bill about it.  Fine, but the bit turns out to be about Drew's new potential woman...not Dan's.It is a quick read.  10 minutes or so.  Not worth 99  - nothing against story or author - but article length items are only worth it when free (to this reader) .I think the author has some skill in plot creation.  Perhaps a longer work would show skill at story arc development.  I would try another - longer piece.Christine