Review: Just okay...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 25, 2012
I would not compare this writing to that of a Twilight Zone episode. Nor was I surprised or shocked by the ending.  Very early in the story the ending seemed too obvious to me and, based on other reviews I'd read, I kept waiting for a twist that would surprise me.  But the ending was as I'd predicted. I'm not saying I foresaw all of the details but (without spoiling the story for anyone) the bigger picture of what was happening was telegraphed way too early.  It's not a bad first effort but I did find the writing style to be somewhat overly descriptive at times.  (Example: "A cacophonous blast from the bedroom distracted him from the lovingly arranged photos...."  This reminded me of an English Comp assignment to incorporate more adjectives in your writing. Sometimes in writing less is more and I think a more succinct writing style would have worked better.)  All that being said, it's an interesting short story and as it is the author's first publication I think there's a lot of potential for even better stories in the future.