Review: Poor Editing and Unreal Dialogue
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 5, 2012
This story had a really good premise that, I feel, was poorly executed. I know people say the editing in ebooks is shabby, but this one was unbelievable. At one point, Erica the ex-FBI agent become Eric. And the improper use of the word "use" was driving me insane. I also felt that the conversations were stilted. There was a lack of use of contractions that made most conversations sound unreal and forced. And as much as the two women were FBI agents, they were portrayed as damsels in distress which I found excessively annoying.The plot: a mass murderer has 30 days left to live and will give up another 10 bodies if the FBI agent of his choosing helps him find out who his father was. It's discovered that almost all members of his family were murdered, but all cases were viewed as accidents and were never investigated. Before the last body is given up by the serial killer, the agents and police involved will escape death a number of times and will continue to be shocked time and time again.Since this book ends with an open ending, I certainly hope the author gets herself a better editor and perhaps some more experience on writing realistic conversations.