Review: 3 stars for story, 0 stars for Grammar
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 17, 2012
After averaging my scores for story and writing (grammar), I was at a 1.5 and decided to be generous and round up to 2 stars in hopes this author will PLEASE take English 101.  The story itself isn't bad, but I honestly don't think I've ever read anything with such horrible grammar, spelling, punctuation, and tense errors before.  In the acknowledgements at the end the author thanks someone for proofreading the book, but I'm quite certain that person must have been a 2nd grader.We've all seen the Friends episode, but let me reiterate: You're = You Are.  'Your' shows possession.  The tense changes are distracting, the run on sentences make it hard to read, and the spelling errors are embarrassing.  I realize that "accept" and "except" sound alike, but they have quite different meanings.  If you're charging people for a book, don't you even read it before releasing it to the public?  "Of" and "Have" cannot be used interchangeably.  For example: "I would OF called you."  NOOOO!  It's "I would HAVE called you."  This error must be in the book 100 times.  It may not bother everyone, but I can't take anyone seriously as a writer if they don't even have a basic understanding of proper grammar.  And what is with the repetition of words?  Use a thesaurus!!!  The hero and son both have lopsided grins and grass green eyes.  We get it.  And don't get me started on the moaning, groaning, and growling.  There are other ways to make noises.Ok, now that I've gotten that off my chest - the actual story isn't horrible.  There are some plot holes, but I like the concept of the book if not the execution.  **SPOILERS**  It doesn't really make sense that the H didn't hear from anyone in his hometown in THREE years that he had a kid.  Somehow, I think the news would have reached him.  Also, when he left the 2nd time, why on earth did he end all communication with his child??  That made NO sense whatsoever.  Six months went by and he and the h didn't even call or text once to discuss their son?  No skyping?  No face time?  No emails??  In what universe is it ok to just abandon your kid and not even call him on the phone?  The media wasn't tracking his calls and emails!  And since when are rock stars supposed to live squeaky clean, scandal-free lives?  **End Spoiler**If the errors are fixed and maybe the plot holes are reworked a bit, the story has potential.  As it stands, I don't think I'll be giving this author another chance.