Review: Still needs a good editor
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 23, 2011
I've waded through the whole series before commenting.First the good:Lalonde has some interesting ideas, creates characters one can care about, and in many ways spins a good yarn.  As with much classic sci-fi, we must suspend disbelief in order to enjoy the yarn. I therefore didn't ding him very much for the inconsistencies others have noted.Now the bad:Even with Broadcast 6, Lalonde's writing remains a major distraction. He often uses words that don't mean what he thinks they mean. Many of his sentences are run-ons or fragments. Too many are almost (or are completely) unintelligible.  He doesn't seem to know the differences between "were" and "was," "they're" and "their," "its" and "it's," "whose" and "who's" or "affect" and "effect."  He consistently drops clunkers like "her and Laura," "her and her mother," and (unforgivably, since I don't think there's ever a place for) "her and I."  It's just sloppy writing, and makes it hard to appreciate the story line.  His poor punctuation makes it worse.While the books are inexpensive, I'd suggest that Lalonde hire a good editor even if it adds to the retail price.  Unless that happens, I doubt I'll be reading any more of his work.