Review: I wish it was proofed
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 21, 2013
I like the idea of the story.  Two people starting on new aspects of their lives.  I wanted to believe that Michelle was strong.  But no condom?  Heroines hopefully can find a way to give into sex without just believing what a guy says.I kind of felt like she went along with it because she was insecure about her weight.  If that was the case we needed to see her be insecure though out the story.In some ways she was strong but in the ways that make us love or hate a character she fell flat.Get an editor.  At one point someone says "Michelle and you...."  It should read, "you and Michelle."  On another she lets the f___ word out and it is mentioned she never said it before, but she said it two pages earlier.Trust is always a good obstacle for a story but it felt as though the author didn't know how to anchor it.