Review: Unbelievable
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 05 6, 2012
I was intrigued by the premise of this story.  I expected a believable tale of two hopeless people finding each other, loving each other and making a better life together.  Needless to say I was disappointed.E. Johnson covered a lot of the problems with this book in her review.  The writing is clumsy, wordy and not very good.  The editing is very poor.  I've come to expect some errors in kindle e-books, a missing or misspelled word here or there.  There are so many editing errors and misused words in this book; also there are sentences in this book where it's hard to decipher what the author's intent was.  Just a few examples:"Where is your stuff was?""Onyx put her finger up for quietness (who speaks like this)"Admitting her love for him made her embarrassed" (reminds me of the English lessons where you are asked to rewrite a sentence correctly)"What kind of brother chooses that SOB over his own INTERMEDIATE family""Your family is straight up crazy on a whole `nother plan than reasonable insanity" (what does that mean)If you think I'm being hyper critical these quotes can all be found within a few consecutive pages. (at the 90% location on your kindle)Then there are the inconsistencies *(spoiler)Jona/Hope has a GED but she can't read, she explains to James that she memorized the letters for the correct answers from a copy of the test that she had.  She constantly tells us she never planned to leave the streets, she could never live indoors.  So why was having the GED important?  Not to better herself she made no attempt to learn to read.  Wait -for- it, at the end of the story we find out why she has the GED, she's going to college.  She can't freaking read but, she's enrolled in college.The Black brothers James & Ethan are big, rich and powerful , but everyone in book disrespects them.  In one scene Ethan, Nicole (Ethan's wife he loves and adores and can't live without) and James are present  when Onyx Heart threatens to "beat the crap out of; cut her tongue out and stab Nicole in the back.  What do the big bad powerful Black brothers do?  Ethan tells Onyx to "quit threatening to do bodily harm to Nicole, She's pregnant!  That's it, that's all.  Thank God she's pregnant!There are so many more.When the Heart's enter the book, it's over, everything spirals out of control.Save your money!  Just one girls opinion.