Review: Good storyline, but needs cleaning up
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 21, 2012
For the most part, I liked this story. The plot line was well-developed and interesting. The setting was nicely done. I could see the "old west" through the author's words. I also liked the characters. But eventually there became way too much of Artemis Doolittle. It seems like he was the sole thing holding the story together at several points. Sentence structure was good and the writing style read easy enough. The story does have fairly descriptive sex scenes, and in my opinion these always detract from any relationship two characters have. I always begin to wonder if the couple would be together without it. The ending didn't entirely surprise me, though the twist in Morgan Slater's past did. Overall, a good story, but better if it was cleaned up.