Review: Good but...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 28, 2011
Nice idea, real people, nice development for a short piece, nice writing, HOT sex, but....Follow through is a little weak. Spoiler Alert.WHY did dad want the bracelet so badly?A hero needs to be DIRECTLY involved in the climax.  Not dither.  Not make a phone call to save the girl when the bad guy is holding a gun on her.  Dithering is not attractive.WHY give him a gun if you're not going to use it?  You bring it up, you have to follow through.  Or don't bring it up.So, I will follow the writer, but hope for a little improvement in follow through.