Review: Good foundation, but needs work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 8, 2012
Wyatt is an average college student with papers to write and girl problems. He doesn't believe in ghosts or fantastical, and his life is about as average as it gets, or so he thinks...Many of the characters are likeable, and Wyatt is a strong individual with a good head on his shoulders. Some of the explanations for the supernatural creatures are creative, and although modern-day young adult supernatural fanfiction can be very overdone these days I thought it was an interesting enough story to keep me turning the pages. The author has thought about how various supernatural/magical forces would interact and remain hidden throughout history and today. There is also a sprinkle of Native American spiritualism, interestingly enough. I liked the premise of the story, and wanted to see what Wyatt would do once he discovered his ancestry.The dialogue could use some polish; sometimes it sounds stiff. There were a few times I thought "college kids don't talk to each other so formally." It was probably a lack of contractions that threw me off there. There are some spelling/word miuse errors ("pail" skin). It's still readable and understandable, but that is bothersome. It could have been better, though. Many of the characters have nicknames and they're often thrown out in batches, so it can be difficult to keep them straight. Sometimes the story drags, but there is a good tale waiting to be discovered. The cover is also kinda cool, which has to count for something. :-p With some stylistic improvements and better proofreading, I could see the sequel as a very good book. This one is more "meh" as its errors really drag it down.