Review: Problematic, but I still enjoyed some parts
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 2, 2014
I was drawn to this book from a blurb on a book blog. Pair that with a hot cover, good reviews, and the word ménage...I'm sold. Click!  However, that's what compels me to write this review.There were many things that were problematic with this book, yet it still held my attention. This is the first book that I've read from Alexx Andria. Quite honestly, I thought this must have been a debut book for the author considering the massive amount of grammatical errors and editing issues. I was a little shocked to learn that it was not a first work.The formatting and layout of the book was just odd. I wasn't sure if they forgot to go back and check for errors before publishing or if my Kindle app on my iPad was broken. It would stop mid sentence and skip a couple of lines like it was starting a new paragraph and then just pick back up with the same sentence. Sometimes there were multiple copies of the same sentence. Then at times when spacing seemed appropriate, such as with a change in POV or paragraph, there would be no spacing. It would just stick a # in there and keep on going to what seemed to be a new chapter. This happened continually through the book to the point of distraction, and it was all problems that could have been fixed with just a basic reread before publishing.Then there's the issue of grammatical errors and sentence structure. A good portion of the dialogue was not set up or closed properly. "Quotes" from two different people would be back to back without set up so you had no idea who was even talking. You had to read several sentences to get an idea of who was having the conversation, and then it was just guesswork on who was saying what. This caused me to have to read paragraphs multiple times to comprehend what was being said. There were also some inconsistencies in the storyline that I think could have been picked up by a good beta reader. For example, at one point when Jax and Hunter leave the club to attend to something (not going to insert spoilers), they take Jax's monster truck. It's pointed out that they intentionally took the truck and not their motorcycles so they could flatten anyone in their way if need arise. However, when they go to leave from their destination the author has them getting on their Hogs. What happened to the truck?I really liked Jax and Hunter. They were believable and endearing characters. I did find them both to be a little soft and shiny for supposed hardened criminals that run a MC. The story starts out with the execution of a member of each rival MC. Being co-presidents of the MC Kings, Jax and Hunter need to get to the bottom of what's going on. However, they come off as clueless. I knew almost immediately who was behind the killings, yet they never did figure it out themselves. Someone had to directly tell them what was happening. I just didn't get the gritty, alpha vibe that I would associate with presidents of a MC. It seemed like they tried to appear to be bad in order to camouflage the goodness. Sort of like misplaced Frat boys with tattoos and motorcycles. However, I did enjoy watching them be bad!Jax and Hunter were the redeeming characters of this book for me. I didn't connect with Zoe. She annoyed me to no end. First of all, you don't go from sort-of virgin to taking it from two men at the same time at your first rodeo. Zoe was portrayed as sheltered/nave, yet she was head of the charge on the investigation. It was an inconsistent personality trait. While contemplating having two men, "Good Gravy" was an actual thought in her head. She was supposed to be endearing, but came off as flighty to me. I also thought that the constant reminder that she was overweight was unnecessary. I mean seriously, two GROWN men made a fat joke about her to her face. I felt like the issue of "curves are beautiful" would have been much more effective without the grade school theatrics.Even with all of that distraction, it was an interesting storyline. I thought the author did well with keeping the story going. I didn't become bored. I found myself wanting to know what was going to happen, and the sex scenes were really HOT! Andria really knows how to turn up the steam. I felt the emotion of those moments, and that's an accomplishment that many authors have yet to achieve. I think with a good editing team that this could be quite a different book.