Review: Okay book.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 5, 2014
I'm trying to figure out all of the five star reviews. I don't understand what they read. First off, the book had potential but it was way too short to handle the story line. It was rushed. It had many cliched lines as well. You kind of knew what was coming next.And the heroine and hero were all over the place. I had a hard time figuring out what was happening next. Or who said what.  I'm sure this is a new author because the writing hasn't been perfected as well.Nicole and Davis meet on a plane. Nicole is invited to fly to Figi on Davis' plane. Davis isn't the one who invited her. An associate of theirs did. The plane crashes on an island and they connect sexually.  They fall in love after about two weeks. Yep, that's realistic. They are rescued and they marry when he finds out she's pregnant. However, before that he gets back with his ex wife, Anne, whom he still loves. A number of problems arise because of his close relationship with Anne. He's keeping some of it from his new wife.In the meantime Davis' company is facing problems with an employee selling top secrets. This leads to him having security on Anne and Nicole.Nicole finds out about Davis' doing things he probably shouldn't have with Anne. Their relationship has issues and is about to fall apart. That's pretty much the premise of the book.Pros:Started off okay.The author probably has a lot of potential, but she has to take more time showing us the story.It's a 3 because the story isn't bad and writing a book can't be easy.Cons:We're told the story instead of shown their love. Paint a picture of love please.Rushed. Rushed. Rushed. The story wasn't explained very well. The switching of scenes with no visual build up throws off the readers.Do people really fall in love in under 14 days? Too much. Didn't feel the love and lust connection.The Homeland Security and terrorist angle wasn't developed at all. It was rushed. Adding more to that could have made the book more enjoyable.Grammar. It should be written like....He said, "Xxxxx xxxxx xxxx."  Not...he said "xxxxx xxxx." Where are your commas and other punctuation? There were quotations in the middle of the sentences and I wasn't sure who said what.If you write he wants her, please paint the picture of that desire and why. Don't just write it. Is it something she wears, is it her hair, is it her words, is it the way his heart beats, is it her eyes?  Why does he want her?