Review: Great Idea, Huge Holes In Storyline and Why Did We Need the Ending?
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 17, 2012
This is a ten minute or so length short story with huge plot holes along the way.  The basis for the overall plot is a good one.  A stuck up woman, has been set up on a bad blind date by her roommate because she borrowed her dress. However it is never really explained why her date is so bad, other than he ordered spaghetti and has a well paid job where he works out expiration dates.  We as readers are dropped in at the end of her job where she is already planning on getting up her roommate for setting this date up.  It's hard to know straight away who you should be siding with as you begin this tale, did something actually happen earlier on the date or is Cindy just stuck up and is disappointed Bob's not a lawyer of something?  How hard would the whole date have been to add or at least a few minutes before. Surely that should have been the easiest part of the story to write, pick from millions of potential embarrassing things he could have done, habits he could have.  Anyway we're left wondering what's so bad about Bob as the date ends?  Shortly after Cindy learns some of Bob's table talk could have made her a mint if she'd bothered to pay attention, convinced she's about to learn some crucial information to make her rich she decides to give Bob a call?  What is Bob's deep dark secret?Mild Spoilers - We and Cindy learn what that is, and this new direction of the story does make the whole short story seem like it's about to become a lot more interesting but then Cindy just walks out.  Surely access to what's in Bob's workplace is a lot more interesting than him having access to confidential financial reports.  Then the whole Cindy plot ends and we have a new one for the last couple of paragraphs out of nowhere that adds nothing to the plot or is even explained how these new visitors know about what's there in the first place.It could have been a really good short story, it just had too many holes and a stupid out of nowhere ending that seemed to be there for no other point other than to have a twist in the final paragraph.