Review: Not a bad story, absolutely abysmal grammar!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 1, 2012
Please, please, please, get someone with a basic understanding of grammar, punctuation, word use & definitions to review your next try at writing! I almost couldn't get through the story it was so bad. There were many malapropisms (in case that's too big a word, it means substituting one word that sounds similar for the word that should be used, ie, photogenic vs photographic memory. Photogenic describes when someone looks good for the camera consistently,and has nothing to do with memory!) Apostrophe (') followed by an s denotes the possessive, not plural! The possessive of a word ending in y is ---y's, not ---ies! Ies is the plural. This author got the two mixed up consistently. She also never learned that "to" is a  preposition, such as running TO someone, and "too" means also. In many cases words were missing or obviously transposed. Punctuation and use of quotes was done poorly.Now that my grammar rant is over, it wasn't a bad story, although the Dom was by no means in control of either himself or the submissive. This book definitely doesn't depict training as it should be done. An explanation for that was given, but it could have been written differently to make that aspect of it better. Once again we have a book that portrays people getting into Ds because they are damaged.I gave it 2 stars because the story had potential, even though someone like Sherise Sinclair or Callypso Masters could have done it much better.