Review: Falls short of being truly satisfying
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 26, 2011
This story introduces us to Ham and Zia, two young people who are given extraordinary weapons by an old man who sees them and takes a fancy to them.  Part of the issue with the story is the format chosen.  It is obvious that the authors have a longer story to tell about these two and I found myself wondering why - if the events in this short story were important - these events were not included in the longer story.  It's a frequent problem in finding short free works on Kindle.  Too many of them are designed to simply whet the appetite so the reader will buy the longer work.  As a sales technique, it may be worthy.  As a way to produce satisfying work, it is lacking.  This isn't a true short story as much as it is a teaser.Even if you decide to accept this truncated tale on its own merits, the set-up still raises questions.  Is it likely that the old man would find two people worthy of the weapons so close together?  How can a "memory weapon" fix a leg?