Review: Needs major work
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 28, 2010
Okay, I started and stopped this book several times mainly because the editing is horrific. I don't even know if it was edited at all. There were grammatical errors, misspelled words and words in the wrong order. The book at times seems to be written from the first, second and even third point of view and the Kindle version even had different fonts alternating throughout. All of this took away from the story and the mistakes got even worse the closer you got to the end of the book.The plot seemed undeveloped. The heroine:Kat saw her mother murdered and was sent, by her father, to be raised by her uncle in the hopes that he would keep her safe. Why she was safer with him was never explained. She meets a boy: Kenji and falls in love with him. Kenji goes away, but years later Kat is reintroduced to him and told she must marry him per an agreement both of their families had made when they were born. The premise is that they both have powers which are to be used to fight evil. There is a Japanese mob and other villains who want to find a way to use their powers to rule the world.(insert evil laugh here).The story reads like a Scooby Doo mystery from that point on. Kenji is a secret agent and has a team of agents backing him, the entire climax of the story was filled with the team, including Kat, her uncle and a few other family members fighting scores of assassins and ending with ***SPOILER ALERT***  Kat and Kenji using their power to kill all of the assassins at once. Which begs the question, if it was that easy, why not do that in the first place.The villains are only described by their physical appearance throughout most of the book and only at the end are they named, not that we would have known them anyway since the book does not go into detail about them at all. There was a lot of description regarding what kinds or cars everyone was driving, what kinds of watches, earrings and shoes Kenji and his crew were wearing, all of which was unnecessary. The story was based in Atlanta and the Georgia mountains, which seemed odd for a Japanese ninja fight. Also the hero was described as being a traditional Japanese Samurai but several times said slang terms which seemed out of character. To the authors credit, she did have Kat to question him on it, but it was still out of place. There were more character inconsistancies I could name but this is already rather wordy and I think you get the point.There was a very obvious secondary romance thrown in as a set up for a sequel. Lets hope the author has time to hone her craft and the second story will be more put together.