Review: Good idea, but I wish the writing were better
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 4, 2013
Warning: This review might contain what some people consider SPOILERS.Rating: 6/10PROS:- The premise is interesting: a dragon who is stuck in human form but still behaves like an animal.- Tori is a cute character. The childlike way in which he views the world made me chuckle more than once, especially when contrasted with Jerney's world-weary cynicism. (see cons below also)- There are some clever details in the story, such as those relating the dragons' treatment of their hoards and the mixture of red and gold in Tori's hair.- I couldn't help smiling at the mischief all of the characters are constantly getting into.CONS:- The writing is simple, mostly telling rather than showing. Here's an example: "They all got to see Nyle change into his gigantic dragon form and fly off with Leon on his back." My reaction to this was, "Um...*I'd* like to get to see that, too." But I didn't, since there was no description of what it looked like.- I couldn't figure out whether I found Tori's childlike behavior cute or a little creepy.- (This isn't necessarily a con; it's just a warning for potential readers.) The story isn't really a romance. Tori is too young for the guys to do anything but a chaste kiss on the forehead, and it's more a feeling of affection than love that they're developing at the end.Overall comments: There's an element of the ridiculous about this story ("to avoid being squished, the baby [Tori] would be raised at the castle!"), but I found the silliness mostly cute rather than annoying. It's a decent story, but with the simplistic writing, I simply couldn't get into it. The story basically consists of "this happened, then this happened" statements all the way through, without much examination of the characters' feelings.