Review: Worth more Stars - but...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 1, 2013
...there are formatting issues that need to be resolved.  Perhaps the author was trying for an avant-garde approach, but I feel that trailering different characters' quotes end to end without paragraph indents seriously harms the read.  You end up with huge blocks of text and your perception of POV (Point Of View) can easily get confused. In short, it makes reading this story a challenge, and that is a shame.  This could easily have been a 4 Star review, and even a 5 with a few editing fixes as well..... This is a dark, chilling, and disturbing read that leaves you thinking.  It has an edgy story line that I won't reveal here (unlike one of the other reviewers who gives altogether too much away).  Fair warning; It goes places that some readers might find distasteful, but there is a REASON for that. Given the nature of short stories, you don't usually find character interactions this involved, but it pays off at the end.  What you have here is the raw version of just the kind of writing that wins critical acclaim from serious literati.  I think a few fixes in format and editing could make3:53 a.m.a story that people remember and talk about.  I hope the author makes those fixes, this story deserves them.  Believe me, I don't normally read this kind of story, I'm a Science Fiction fan.  I originally came to review the cover and ended up reading in fascination.  This author has something; a future in writing.P.S. The cover is a perfect introduction to this story.  I wouldn't change IT at all.