Review: Eternal Breath of Darkness - Eternal need for edit - Eternal High School Characters
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 06 10, 2014
I made it through Chapter 5, but not easily. The "hero" is a maladjusted, childish, temperamental immortal who hasn't aged a day since puberty. The woman he supposedly loves is in mortal danger, but he wants to play with the powerful vampire instead of kill him. Never mind how terrified his darling is or that he has been warned that this monster has unusual power. He wants to vent his temper and that's more important. The guy is a certified jerk - being a dragon is no excuse! The heroine is equally annoying and immature.Then there's the editing. Missing words, incorrect usage of the wrong vocabulary, stilted dialogue. Even for free, it's over. The one star is for effort. The concept has some merit and originality.