Review: Not impressed
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 16, 2014
I don't like being confused while reading fiction. So the guy needs his clothes dried because he got all wet from the rain. Cheesy but ok.  So the girl put them in the washer... Ok. Very detailed, up to this point. Details about taking phone and wallet out of pockets, adding soap to the washing machine etc.  Then we move forward, they make out, end up in bed together.  Now his phone is ringing, waking him up.  Well shouldn't it be in the kitchen since he carried the girl from the kitchen to bed? Nah, he totally paused while in this heated, passionate frenzy to grab his phone and wallet? Um, sure we'll go with that, but wait, more confusing because he takes his phone out of his pocket! Um, last we heard, in excruciating detail, pants were in the washer... Doubt said pants made it to the dryer because of the whole passionate frenzy and carrying the girl to bed.  So to sumerize, I was quite bothered by the way this story did not follow an orderly sequence of events.