Review: Could have been a good book.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 05 7, 2012
I liked the storyline but other than that I was constantly thinking of all the things wrong.  The lack of editting was so obvious. So many mistakes that it was a constant disruption in the story. Examples:  Jesscia, Jessisca, Alvrez, somet imes, f, lyin, defintely, rached, od, grapped, awa, attemtped, Riccis, cook (supposed to be cool), pulledopen, forthecoming, sufferingt, assit, and so on...That portion is in the last 12% of the story.Spoilers*Did I miss the prequel and the sequel? Something in the past with Sara, Johnny, and Jake that's explained, and it affects the storyline. Constantly left trying to figure out exactly what's going and never do. The epilogues is not an epilogue. The story merely ends with no conclusion. Unnecessary characters add to distract from the story.*The bad guy unrealistically "underestimates" her three times back to back. She gets the crap beat of her but keeps getting back up and going. Really? Plus, he doesn't need Jessica, keeps saying he doesn't need her, but keeps her alive, going so far as to take her when he goes to blow everyone up never intending to show anyone he has her.*Jessica calls Jake, passes out, leaves an open line, and he hangs up. You STAY on the line to see if you can hear anything and get a lead.*Jake gets shot, has surgery, walks out the hospital immediately after, suffers no repercussions from this all the while searching for Jessica. Quickly after returns to the shooting location. No crime scene. Ok, now my minds is distracted from the story because there is too much impossibility to overlook.*Why do they repeatedly say the masked guy in the video footage is so familiar but nothing comes of it?*How do people walk in past guards, into their home, without being stopped- especially if you're the enemy mob guy?*None of them, especially someone with Jake's postion, would suddenly yell out he loved her in the middle of the confrontation with Jessica's dad.This is the first I've left a comment like this, constantly saying negative things. If it was only a couple of things that didn't fit or only a few editting mistakes, oh well. And if doesn't affect the story, then it's not as bad. But those were only some of the mistakes AND made it difficult to read/focus/undertand the story.  As much as I'd like to recommend the book, it needs help before it can be good.