Review: could be improved
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 22, 2013
As a light weight, sexually suggestive book, this one meets that objective.  As a mystery, it missed the mark.  There is an obvious lack of editing, and several errors as others have pointed out.  One I haven't seen mentioned is at the end, when Goldie says she is going to a baby shower, (location 2741) and a bit further along, she is talking about the gift she has for the bride-to-be at the wedding shower.  In several places, some identifiers such as "Main Street" were oddly displayed, perhaps because substitutions were made later, and names were changed?  For example, loc 2011 reads:An hour later we were onMain Street  (Italicized for no genuine reason)checking out the shops.  The business district ......................This brings me to another error.  The description of the shops on Main Street says "Not one chain store" yet later on in the chapter, the underwear from Victoria's Secret was described in detail.Even a fun, purely-for-entertainment novel should have some respect for continuity, decent grammar (unless it is a character quote) and enough plausibility to not waste the reader's time. As a first book, a decent offering, and the potential is there for this author. However, more pre-publishing time needs to be spent proof reading and editing.