Review: "Story Line Is Weak, Better Editing A Must"
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 15, 2014
As a frequent reader, I was looking forward to a high action story.  The beginning led me to think this will engross me.  It starts with a badly injured woman struggling her way on foot at night to a nearby hospital.  She is soaking wet in water and blood, a bullet wound in her shoulder (which one?) and two knife wounds (where?).  She should have died, but she is a dedicated survivor who can adapt to any situation.  A nurse, Meridith, coming off duty helps her to ER where Dr. Feldman will treat her.  This woman, calling herself Jasmine, nearly breaks to doctor's wrist denying his attempts to help. She doesn't like his attitude.  She declines painkillers and sedatives. When she is questioned by police she tells them she was on vacation and was mugged by two men.  Jasmine plans on leaving the hospital before the two men she has killed are discovered.  Suddenly this story tends to sweep into erotic emotions and thoughts for Jasmine.  At this point, I'm a little confused as to where this is going, but the poor writing, the over-use of the word 'that' slowed down my reading and at 35 percent I called it quits.  This novel is written in the first person and the character is just too much into herself and got under my skin.  Perhaps if it were written in the third person, it would be more exciting.  Everything seems to be overwritten and better editing could make a difference for this new author.