Review: 2.5 stars, so glad this was only 99
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 15, 2013
I bought this book because it had an interesting synopsis, definitely had promise. Unfortunately, that promise was left unfulfilled. I have no problem with short stories, but when a story is short, glaring errors are more of an issue. The biggest issue I have is with the timeline. How hard is it to type 3 words? "One month later" "Two weeks later" etc. would've been helpful; assuming how much time has passed or trying to mentally calculate it can be frustrating. Also frustrating is trying to figure out who's saying what in a conversation. Even more frustrating is having the MC's be actually in the middle of doing something, then next thing you know they've jumped over that and on to something else without even finishing the first thing. (Ex: when Jack followed Alan to the bathroom, he stood in the doorway feeling shy, then they were in the bed, still damp from the shower. Huh?) Imagine this during their one sex scene! Even the very first scene had me struggling to get through it. Editing needs work, as well as the writing itself. But a cute, sweet story can be found buried in here somewhere.