Review: Needs work
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 22, 2009
I will be right up front and state that I couldn't finish this book.The viewpoint kept switching from one character to another from paragraph to paragraph. A few times it even switched to omniscient.  This was not only annoying, but extremely distracting.Also, one character seems to have some kind of secret that the author didn't want us to know, I assume until the end.  However, some of the story was even told from her viewpoint. Now, if you are basically in someone's mind, wouldn't you know their secret?One other point was that the emotions of the characters just seemed extreme. The main character would go from smiling & joking to an almost murderous rage from one sentence to the next. And, yet, no one seemed to notice his extreme emotional instability. They even referred to his 'boyish charm' or something like that.He seemed to me to be extremely emotionally unstable. Which is fine, but he wasn't hiding it & yet, no one seemed to notice.***Spoiler**** (not much of one since I didn't finish it, but wanted to warn)At one point, the main character's girlfriend tells the guy's best friend a story that leads the friend to think the main character had RAPED her. At the end of that conversation, he asks the woman to 'look out' for his buddy while he moves out of town. Yeah, if I think a woman's been raped, I would definitely tell her to be sure to be good friends with and take care of her rapist. <sarcasm>I'm sorry. The premise seemed good, but the writing was not.I am giving 2 stars instead of one in hopes that perhaps the author will take this criticism and do some rewriting. I think he has talent; it's just very 'raw' talent.