Review: Could have been much better.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 25, 2014
The writer has potential that is yet unrealized.  One of the most glaring things I noticed was her constant mention of the body organs not functioning at all - which didn't make an iota of sense.  People talk by having inhaled air when exhaled pass over the vocal cords, if you can't breath, you can't talk.  The body heals by having the organs functioning and processing food - even blood - throughout the body.  Organs don't work, this doesn't happen.  I saw this as not being well thought out.Too much graphic sex makes this lady a hack instead of an author, sex is NOT necessary nor even desirable to tell a good story.  I'm sick to death of "massive shafts" and "moist, wet panties" (which is a good trick with no functioning organs) taking up the majority of what would be a otherwise good story.Robyn has the potential and ability to be an author instead of a hack.  I found myself enjoying the basic story line with the exception of the above noted items.  Anyone can write sex material, few can tell a good story.  Robyn could tell some really great stories with more attention and thought to details and concentrating more on the story itself instead of cheap sex.