Review: its worth the time to make it better
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 25, 2012
I was pulled into the story right from the start with a good mix of action and story line.  The twist (the MRI) begins a new story with some of the same characters and it starts out ok as well.  The middle of the story gets bogged down in an uninspired attempt to get to the end of the story which was interesting though brief. Because this short story is clearly the beginning of a longer one, I think the author should have tried to keep the intensity consistent throughout.  That it was short and easy to read made it worth the time but I'm not waiting on the sequel.  The interesting "use" of the MRI (though stretching the science a bit) has opened a door that could lead to some good stories but they deserve better development.