Review: Needs to find a good editor
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 03 6, 2012
I bought both books at the same time (something I have to remember not to do again with an unknown author) because I love the genre, and it was a painful mistake, but you are going to get the benefit of my pain. I know that I have a problem others overlook--with the sheer volume of books being published now using editors who don't really know the English language well (or at all)--but this book (and it's previous novella) appears to have completely missed the editing cycle.First, there were the basics--words left out, extra words left in, obvious spellcheck replacements that were just wrong, and a number of other painful errors. She is still struggling with point of view and verb tenses. Any halfway competent editor should have been able to fix that in a single pass. Two at the most.Next, the writer had some difficulties keeping track of the details in her scenes--a particularly memorable point was where she had her hero hide his hands under the pillow because his claws came out and in the next sentence was tweaking her nipples with those (clawed) hands! Oowww!--and an unfortunate tendency to tell the reader things instead of showing the reader and letting them decide.Beyond that, the story line is a re-tread of a genre standard that had holes you could drive a doublewide tractor-trailor through with plenty of room to spare. The scene transitions were choppy (better than in the first, tho'), the characters had little depth (she did work in some background and detail, but not much), there was some world building (which she told you 'only made sense' in the middle of the story!), it had a single plot line (pack politics) that had no depth with a couple of basic subplots (the romance and pack traitors). There were a few minutes of semi-realism in their behaviors, but the author doesn't manage to hang on to that sense of reality for more than a few lines at a time. The worst part was that even the sex scenes were only a little bit better than the novella but still not terribly interesting, so if you are just looking for a little soft porn, this isn't it.My suggestion is to hold off on this until it's been revised. A LOT.