Review: Nice blend of horror and romance
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 02 15, 2013
This long short story/short novella rates at a 3.5 on my personal view, but only because of a few grammar/editing issues.Leah wakes up in the gutter, which is odd because the last thing she remembers is celebrating her birthday. Now, some people might not think that was odd at all, but apparently Leah does. She looks around and sees the town she grew up in, but different. Darker. And smelling acrid...of what, she's not sure. A man she remembers tries to help her, but didn't he die in a car accident several years ago? Not good...The story paints the horror aspects brilliantly, but doesn't explain everything that happens. The idea of a love that was meant to be, but was derailed, was wonderful as well. Characters are well developed, but progression of the romance was, to me, a bit rushed and sketchy. I would have liked to see things build a bit more before they are suddenly in love. But it is a short, which does have some limitations. I just didn't feel the reasons why they fell in love.Grammar has a few issues, but not too bad. Some awkward sentence construction like, "...she had issued him with an ultimatum - propose marriage by her birthday or they were through." Some problem with tenses; "She's held her composure.." when the character was referring to herself. A wrong word usage such as, ""Fine, hold up your hair. " he said trying to remain nonplussed." Not enough to ruin it, but enough to give the reader pause in such a short work.Overall, I think the author has a lot of promise and would recommend you give this little story a read.