Review: Truly awful
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 08 24, 2011
I'm not one to pay a lot of attention to what other reviewers have thought of a book.  We all come from different backgrounds and are looking for different things in our reading material.  Some of my best friends love books that I hate and vice versa.But I am really confused by the fact that (at the time of this writing) all the other reviews for this book are five star ratings.  People don't just like this story, but LOVE it?Quinn is a young man who comes from a long line of vampire watchers (or, if you go by the book description, "vampire watcher's," which should have been fair warning for me).  Watchers are a sort of super-guard.  Quinn's father and grandfather both died defending a vampire Baron.  This Germanic Baron is referred to as "royalty."  I couldn't really figure out if vampire royalty was different than regular royalty or if it co-existed.  Barons are nobility, not royalty, but whatever, right?  Vampires are supposed to be a well-kept secret, but apparently the fact that this baron doesn't age or die doesn't tip anybody off to his secret.Quinn (yes, he does have an Irish name - apparently his dad went to Ireland at some point and likes the name) and those around him all speak and act in a strikingly modern way.  If somebody gets married, they have a "reception."  Stuff like that.  As far as the actual historical setting of the story, that was a little vague.  Quinn's dream is to be the watcher for Katrina, the daughter of the Baron.  It seems as if they may have grown up together, so I don't know if she is growing, will always be the same age, ages at a human rate until she reaches a certain age, or something else.  Katrina wants to be a great vampire warrior.A great deal of foreshadowing happens, there is a huge amount of clunky exposition, Quinn and his brother go on a scouting trip, and then the story just sends.  The rest of the download is the first ten chapters of a book about Katrina where I guess we have a chance of finding out how nobility is royalty, how an unaging noble can escape detection, what time period they're actually in, and how old Katrina actually is.  I didn't read it.  I already knew the author didn't care enough about her readers to even get her short story proofread, so I couldn't imagine what further indignities she had in store for us.The grammar in this story was truly some of the worst I've ever seen in a free Kindle download.  The misuse of the possessive was the rule, not the exception.  "Vampire's hunted" appears at one point to tell us that vampires enjoyed hunting, not to designate that which an individual vampire was chasing.  There were hundreds of missing commas.  The dialogue was so stilted and anachronistic that it was painful.