Review: not as well written as I would have liked
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 12 1, 2013
I do appreciate that the writer probably put a lot of effort into writing this short story.  But maybe she should try not to write in such a hurried manner.  Just think how much more interesting a story could be if it read as less rushed.  Too much jammed into too few thousand words.  I think I would rather it had been a book and then the dialogue and feelings between the two might not have seemed so stilted or hollow.  I feel this writer needs a little bit more practise in writing, but I do  see loads of promise...