Review: Lame, lame, lame...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 17, 2013
Frat party...group sex...guy and girl both watching...sounds ok so far perhaps.  Believe me, it's not.  This is an amateurish, sex themed short story which I found laughable, poorly written and about as sexy as watching red lights turn green. This short story is also incomplete; it's not even a stand alone tale.Filled with horrible prose, wonderful non-words such as "thrusted" and incredibly bad descriptive text such as "hers was a tongue that felt as soft as goat's cheese on his palate".Hey!!! Could I get some crackers over here???Here is another favorite, "Eric rubbed her mercilessly until she lubricated like a leaking oil tanker".  Makes me think of oil covered shoreline and hapless sea birds during a eco-disaster...not really a turn on for me, but to each his own.Honestly, even at a price point of $0.00, this one isn't really worth your wasted time.  I gave it two stars simply for the laughs it elicited from me.