Review: Bogged down by excess detail and description
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 06 7, 2014
Broken is the love story between Bailey and Kyle. Bailey considers herself broken because of her past. Kyle is a fighter, but also a Buddhist (yeah, I didn’t buy that either). The author includes entirely too much detail and description in the story. It weighs the story down to such a point that I was tempted to skim over most of the book. The story goes very slow due to the excess detail and description. The author even describes Bailey’s job as a mail clerk to the nth detail.The characters were not believable. Bailey seems very immature considering her past. After only one counseling session, Bailey’s nightmares disappear. Wow! I need to meet this counselor. Kyle is a bit too good to be true. The entire scene in which Kyle asks Bailey to be his girlfriend felt immature and high schoolish. The dialogue between the characters is not realistic. The counseling session (which again was described in detail) is a good example of how people do not talk to each other.There were a few moments in the book when the author’s witticism showed through. Perhaps the author should try a more light-headed story for her next book. A really good editor would help with the sheer monotony of the book as well. I’m sure there is a good story in there somewhere, it’s just bogged down by details and way too much description.