Review: surprised!
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 03 18, 2013
I was surprised to see this story built around one small conflict which dragged all the way to the end! The girl was really getting on my nerves with her poor communication style. Shouldn't business owners be better communicators? This story would have had more substance if she confronted him earlier instead of endlessly avoiding issues. It would have been more exciting if there were several misunderstandings vs one small conflict that the whole story was hinged upon. Also the sequel of a few things were mixed up. For example, she opened the door implying she was going in the house; then they were on the darkest corner of the porch but we weren't actually taken there. The main characters should solve their own problems not have a family member tell all at the end. The story idea itself was good though.