Review: Had potential.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 6, 2014
When I write reviews, I don't really ever rate the stars by editing but more for the story itself. However, I will point out that this book's typos really threw my attention off the book a lot while reading. I'm not usually one that's bothered by the editing because most of the time I know what the auther's trying to say, but the bad editing in here is just ridiculous.So many misspelled words..There's one on the very first page at the beginning of the prologue..-Leaving for collage (college)-stomach arch (ache)-as i learnt on my arms (...wow)-plumb breast (plumP breastS)-By know my body is throbbing in anger (now)There's a couple that are repeated making me think the author really thought it was spelled that way.A positive was that it was fast-paced and there's a lot of scenes with them. However, the negative is that it feels like the author just thought of a lot of scenarios and just threw them together... There were no smooth transitions from one scene to the next which in the end made the book choppy.Although I can usually tell when the POV switches from Inferno and Baby Blu, there once was a time I thought it was Inferno talking and had to re-read the beginning of the chapter when I realized it was Baby Blu... So having their names when switching would have been helpful and would've made it a little more organized.Moving on to the dialogue between characters all through out the book.... Is it a question? is it a statement? Come on! There are such things as periods and question marks. The dialogue doesn't have any of it at all. Luckily, most of the time you can figure it out, I guess, but it bothered me.There's a chapter in the second half where it's BB's POV..... It had her in third person for a good part of it and then just switched to first person when it should have just stayed in her first person. o_0*Minor Spoilers*On to the actual story..I think I liked the characters enough, but I probably would've loved them if there was some build up in some of the scenes before it actually happens. Like after six years of not seeing each other, they both say from their POVs that they are nervous/anxious to see each other again but it just.. happens. She's a councilor at the high school and she goes to a student's house and BAM he's just randomly there to see her (How did he know she was there when he said he hasn't seen her around and neither have his parents who live next door to her?) So yeah, he shows up practically says what's up, kisses her then leaves and then the next chapter following he's picking her up for a date. Wth happened in between all that? And when she was at the student's house talking to the parent and Inferno interrupted her convo... She didn't go back to finish speaking with the guy and the next thing you know she's got Tommy (the kid) staying with her while she's trying to get granted custody. Sigh.I really, really could have found myself loving Baby Blu if the author just showed how emotionally involved she was with the other characters and kids, you know? Taking Tommy from an abusive household makes her a good person, but how was she and Tommy feeling about the transition? Mad? Upset? Relieved? Because some kids still don't want to leave their parents even if they are abusive, did Tommy give her any struggles or found it hard to leave his father? You didn't have any struggles for just plucking the kid from his home? And with Trax, what kind of person is she if she just ups and leaves without saying bye to him (or Inferno for that matter)? Supposedly she comes to care and love them but you don't just leave a 12 year old that you've formed a bond with without saying nothing. And when she comes back he's still mad (understandable) and she's like "oh" and has an epiphany that he's more upset than she thought... Makes me think he loved and adored her more than she did him. Which is messed up to me. She says a couple words and all things are ok again. It doesn't work like that! You'd have to build up your relationship again but that wasn't shown in the book. I get she just up and left but Inferno didn't keep tabs on her while she was away? She was in a shooting at school and he didn't know? Do they really love each other geez.How can I be emotionally invested in a book if the book itself doesn't feel that emotionally invested?There are some parts that I thought would have been talked about but weren't. She sees the red underwear in his room and flees thinking its someone elses. You'd think later in the book he'd get to explain (he got em' for her) but its not he who brings it up, it's her and he never gets his say to explain. Then there was a part where Inferno said Trax's mom has tried to get in contact with him again so I thought maybe there would be some juicy parts where she shows up, you know? But she never does. You can't introduce someone and then have them not show up. If they are going to be absent keep them there :/ Disappointed with that bit.Would I recommend this book? When this book gets fixed up and the editing is improved, come back to me and I might say yes.