Review: Weak execution torpedoes potential for great story
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 5, 2014
As much as I hate leaving less-than positive reviews, I have to say this tale is not very well told.(I feel like a total sh*te for even writing that.) The story is good -- the execution almost completely kills it. Dragging pace, lack of momentum, tons of exposition...as well as some typos and curious grammar just bury a really good premise. The constant and intrusive use of italics for the inner monologues of the main characters was quite off-putting as well. There was a great potential for real drama here -- the shifter fooled by a spell that means his long-lost "true mate" was a lie, added to his new and growing interest in another witch (mega-conflict!)...the whole thing really feels like a missed opportunity.