Review: Revenge
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 21, 2012
Though this story had a good premise, it needed an editor's heavy hand. The structure was too loose.The story would have been better served if many of the adjectives and adverbs had been eliminated. The author's writing style was too wordy. He repeated himself constantly in sentences, using short phrases (separated by commas) to say the same thing with different words, hammering home his point unnecessarily.There were also conflicting scenes/statements. Example: The lead character gives the dimensions of a sinkhole that has suddenly appeared in her house, but it's a page or two later before she moves her bed to actually look at the sinkhole underneath it.Was it scary? No. But it could have been.