Review: Sorry No Dice!
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 11 2, 2013
It's the same review for all three books because the problem I had was present in every book of the series. Only exception being that by book three we get the added "benefit" of the occasional POV shift where we get to relive the wordy mundane we read earlier in a different character's perspective. Ugh!! I'm truly surprised by the amount of 5 Star reviews here.The book reads like a beginners writing class with way too much wordiness and a general lack of flow. The dialogue wasn't natural and the characters weren't believable...for example, how many 5 year old girls would say to their mothers, upon being summoned inside from playing, "ok, momma...I'll be in shortly."It was as if the author was trying to sound literary or at the very least, up her word count! It was very distracting to get that amount of detail in EVERY scene and sentence. Left nothing to the imagination. For instance, it couldn't be that Paige got up to begin her day...this author would instead say,"Paige pushed aside the covers, stood up and put a pair of shorts on followed by a t-shirt. She then made her way to the bathroom, where she proceeded to close the door, retrieve the toothpaste from the top drawer and brush her teeth. NEXT she peed and went to turn on the shower. She waited for the water to warm up. Once the water warmed up, Paige entered the stall and proceeded to take a shower...."Every scene was like that!!! See what I mean by wordy and leaves nothing to the imagination?? I mean all three books in the series read like a play-by-play account of mundane daily activities. What's upsetting is that hidden behind the mundane wordiness is a pretty good story with characters you could grow to care for if given the chance!Find an editor. Rewrite the series into one 400 page novel. Strip all the unnecessary descriptive junk and let the plot weave the story...and have a little faith in your readers ability to fill in the blanks! My goodness...we know what it looks like to brush your teeth and pee in the morning! No need to help us visualize it in detail!!