Review: Could have been better.
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 08 29, 2013
I received a free copy of this novelette-length story from the publisher. This is It is a little bit of story line wrapped around the meeting of two characters who instantly fall in lust with each other.Specifics:*I found it odd how Asher goes from breaking up with his long-time girlfriend to instantly being fascinated by this girl to the point where he is obsessing.*The final sex scene was pretty steamy, but the few earlier in the book were pretty lame. I do realize that it was done that way to be climatic. The intensity builds and builds until you have an explosion of passion, but I think the ones throughout the story were under done for Erotic fiction.*There were some formatting issues throughout the copy that I was given which made reading it quite frustrating.*At one point Trixie refers to him having sex with the twins "last night". That scene hadn't happened last night in the story, it had been two nights before.Positives:With a little more flesh and improved sex scenes, this could have been a thrilling little story. It did make me curious what happens next. What other obstacles will come in their way? Surely the crazy ex is going to cause some rivalry. It's compelling enough to make me want to continue reading.Current ranking: 3 out of 5 starsPotential ranking with a few minor tweaks: 4.5 out of 5 stars