Review: 2.5 to 3 stars
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 11, 2014
This story was okay and has potential but there are a lot of grammatical errors in it and even a missing word in the odd sentence where you need to stop and try and work it out which kills any flow the story might have.  With some editing and a bit of help to excite things a little more this author has potential.