Review: Good but could have been great
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 09 22, 2011
I completely agree with the reviewer who commented that they were often pulled out of the story by editing errors. Sometimes it was a word was left out, typed twice, a sentence abruptly ended, a word was used out of place, a phrase was used incorrectly. It distracted from an otherwise good story. My other complaint would be plot line inconsistency. For example, there was a character named Hillary who spent the first few chapters trying to get the h fired, going as far as calling her a spoiled b--- and trying to physically assault her. However, when Hillary thought her brother, the boss, might be interested in her, she scolded him, warning him to leave the h alone or he might run off the best employee their company had. Or that at the beginning of the book, Nisey has cloudy blue eyes, but later she has flashing green eyes. Inconsistencies like this popped up throughout the book. I bought the whole series on a recommendation so I hope this improves in book 2 and 3.