Review: simplify and proofread your work
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 04 9, 2013
I read it all. The way it ends makes it feel more like chapter one than a short book that really ends. But I want to know what happens next. You need a better editor, someone who says, 'I don't need to know which arm is moving right now.' Sometimes less detail works better than more. A few times you need a better proof-reader to keep me in the book.Great cover. Good ideas in the story. Keep writing.