Review: Poorly served by her English teachers and editors
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 05 12, 2013
I'm not going to review the plot and characters, since others have done so and I concur that both are well done.  However, from the first to the second book in the series, the technical quality of the writing suffered a significant slump.  The first book was marred by misuse of pronouns as objects of prepositions (something that is becoming an epidemic).  This one adds repeated instances of disagreement in number between pronouns and the antecedent noun to which they refer and other grammatical problems. These things throw a person out of the "reader's trance." If the author's English teachers failed to include these items in the curriculum she was taught, then her beta readers or editors need to step into the breach and proof-read the manuscripts before they appear in public.  Alternatively, there are some good, and even entertaining, books on English grammar in print (for example, The Transitive Vampire).