Review: had potential
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 30, 2014
The tenses were wrong. Point of view was mixed up making it difficult to keep with a story line. I debated on 2 or 3 stars for a while. I had to choose 2 because my mind is still reeling from the possibilities that could have been.The story took me from bated breath to..umm what?...all within one page  Very confusing at times. After thinking about what I read for a while... well it's a shame this story wasn't done the way it should have been done. It could have been fantastic.As for the sex scenes, eh. Like the rest of the story, it lacked...All the ideas were there just not finished and polished up.