Review: could be great ...
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 21, 2013
I've just stopped reading at 53% into story.I am having soooo much trouble reading this due to incorrect grammar, spelling and punctuation.The biggest roadblock in the way of me finishing this book are the inconsistencies in the story.I've just decided to check reviews to see if the problems I'm having reading this have put anyone else off as well. I laughed when I read another review saying they'd stopped reading at 53% as well!The proof reading could be the problem. Some sentences are actually repeated nearly exactly a paragraph or two later, with a slight change in the direction. Its like the author has thought of a better  way to word it but doesn't delete the original sentence.The concept is great, and the story telling creates great visuals for me.  Its just that theres way too much rambling.  Its a wonder Ebony can actually walk in a straight line with the amount of time she spends in her own head.  I've had to stop ready and flick back through the story three times because the sentence I've just ready totally contradicts what was written previously.Ebony is annoying...well the mistakes in the story make her less loveable. But, I'm probably much older than the intended audience so, as this book is free, maybe give it a go if the description has caught your attention.I'm still not sure if I'm going to finish the book or not. I'm pretty stubborn about giving a book a fair chance though.  So far I've been skipping paragraphs, I've even just glanced at a page or two before skipping ahead. I may just read the last chapter...