Review: Need to overcome
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 02 8, 2014
There is a great need to overcome poor writing.  The idea (fat girl gets skinny to get the guy back) idea is a bit shallow, but it could have worked if not for the horrible writing style.  It seemed pieces where missing of dialogue or times of events; it needs a good editing for word usage and grammar.Try again, author Clark.