Review: Great story but.....
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 02 23, 2014
Actually the story itself is 5 stars, but the grammar and editing is 1 star.  I admire anyone who has the talent to put a story together, but if you're going to publish it, please use a professional editor.Edie Yates is a complex character.  She and her older sister, Melanie, lived with a tyrant of a father, one who was controlling, manipulative, inflicting metal abuse, sort of like someone from Hitler's regime, keeping diaries of how Edie reacted to his treatment.  But everyone has a breaking point.  Edie met her breaking point on her 18th birthday.Edie has been on a solo journey, finding herself for six years.  She keeps in touch with Melanie, sporadically via emails.  Melanie is older than Edie by 15 years.  Melanie was determined to leave the home by her 18th birthday.  Edie wasn't so lucky - because Melanie was able to escape, their father had plans for Edie's 18th birthday if she planned to escape.Edie comes home to Melanie who's married to Brick, a president of one of the Marauders chapter and there, Edie finds her family.  She bonds with Vasco, an older member of the Marauders and Dawg's godfather and Eliza, her 4 year old niece.  Slowly, Edie begins to make a life for herself in and around the Marauders.  There's chemistry between Dawg and Edie, but neither knows how to act on it and with Vasco being the older male influence for both Dawg and Edie, a friendship is developed instead.  Dawg and Edie begin to hang out with one another, especially when Edie babysits Eliza on their "girls night".  One day Edie inadvertently sends a text message to Dawg (thinking it was going to her fellow waitress, Dawn), an SOS for tampons and from there, the friendship deepens.  A tattoo on the back of Edie's left shoulder intrigues Dawg and as they flirt their way to the next level in this relationship, he learns the meaning of the blue lotus blossom and black koi.Through the trials and tribulations of life in an MC family, Edie and Dawg take their relationship to the next level, but because Dawg (as his name indicates) doesn't know how to be in a relationship, screws up, panics and leaves before Edie wakes up.  Edie, still trying to straighten her head out is upset and angry.  At times, Dawg reminded me of the character, Shy, in Kristen Ashley's Own the Wind.In my opinion, the characters are decently, if not, well developed.  The storyline is actually good.  Edie and Dawg's relationship is given enough time to develop and deepen, likewise, the relationships that Edie builds with Brick, Vasco and rebuilds with Melanie, who's riddled with guilt from leaving Edie behind at such a young age.  The editing or lack of detracted from the story at times which would make any reader who appreciates a good MC story, crazed.Arrow of Time is worth the read if you can overlook the wonky sentence structures and mistaken use of characters in the middle of a paragraph.