Review: Great Potential
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 26, 2014
I received this book in exchange for an honest review.This reminded me of "Charmed".  Without looking at the genre listing, I'm guessing it's a Paranormal New Adult.  It has some adult language, but no sex scenes or violence.Mackenzie finds a letter from her mother and a bunch of potions and books.  The letter tells of her mother having been in a mental institution for a decade, and how they are Wiccans.  The father thought the mom was crazy and locked her up. The father died.  Mackenzie was left alone where she meets her best friend, Rapzodie in foster care.  She reunites with her mother, then meets a mysterious man.As others have said, I think it has great potential.  The story is good, and I like the idea of the mystery. This creepy guy keeps calling her and following her, it gives suspense.  The author can describe physical attributes of people and certain aspects very well.But there were many details left out.  I did not see it advertised as part of a series.  But even if it were, a book of a series should be able to stand alone.  This book cannot, as the ending did not answer any questions.My criticisms on technicalitiesThe book bounces from first person (most of the book) to third person at two points.  It would have been much better completely in third person.  The author wanted to use the "omniscient" POV, yet wrote it in first person that does not allow that.Sentences are long, and it needs to be proofread.  There were blank pages throughout.  There were wrong words used.  (Hey, as an author, I completely understand this--we do the best we can.  We must rely on others to edit/proofread.  Authors see what they want to see in their own work.)I think there was time wasted on some things that could have been used to answer some of the questions.I would definitely be willing to discuss things with the author to help improve this, as I do believe it could become something great.  Writing a book in itself is a major accomplishment, but this one could be great! :)