Review: Not bad at all
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 01 29, 2012
I liked both of these stories, and thought the twists at the end of each were very clever. I thought they were fine as they were, and didn't need to be longer. The one thing that bothered me was the misuse of the word "crumble". In Forever, Portia's face is "crumbling into a mask of misery". I thought perhaps it was just a typo, since the word "crumpling" would've worked there. However, when "crumbling" was misused again in the next story in a sentence where even "crumpling" really wouldn't have been appropriate, I knew better. Hopefully the author has gotten a dictionary since then so that things like this don't detract from his storytelling ability.