Review: Has potential
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 3, 2013
Original Review @ The Indigo Quill: [...]This book has a lot of potential to be something really great. However, the fact that the majority of the characters were unlikable and there was an overabundance of unnecessary vulgarity in some of the language really robbed this book of what it could have been. The author did, however, obviously have a decent storyline and a firm grasp on some of the historical aspects integrated throughout. The female characters were strong, but kind of reminded me of those video games you know were created by men. You know what I'm talking about? The ones where all the female characters you pick are tall, curvy pillars of hotness whose only choices for armor are scandalously clad frocks. It's like all the women in here were just what a man could dream and more.Another thing I didn't really like was the now-becoming cliche of "the parent on their death bed suddenly reveals to the son/daughter that there is a mission, but they leave it vague and open so the said son/daughter has to first figure out what the mission is and how to accomplish it." Sigh. Okay. So it's not as much of a creative storyline if the rising action is set into motion by someone else's recycled conflict.And the grammatical errors. There were several grammatical errors. Guys, if you're going to self publish, but are actually serious about truly being published some day...please, PLEASE put some pennies together to hire someone to edit your work.I know it doesn't sound like it, but this was an okay read. Like I said, it has potential. It just needs a bit more work.