Review: Awkward phrasing and punctuation.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 04 13, 2013
The storyline is generally good and progresses well but the words chosen are stilted. It is as if the author used a thesaurus without truly understanding the meaning of the words. The use of commas where they don't belong is another bothersome problem which caused me to pause and reread sections, interrupting the flow.