Review: Author needs an editor
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 07 11, 2013
This book was a headache to read. It should have been proof read by an outside source before being published as a kindle book. There is no structure to it. It's being told in random segments from several different characters' points of view in some areas and that was very confusing and irritating.  I do see the potential for several stories in this one, but the author didn't seem to know how to develop them. I suggest reading a few books or taking a few courses on character development, plot development, story outline, and structure, and then revising the story and presenting it to an objective outside party for editing. There are some free or really cheap kindle books like Do it write by Nicola Marsh and How to write a book: 3 steps to a perfect outline for your book by Peter Garety that could give you some ideas. You can even find videos on YouTube and articles onthe internet that could help. I would love to read the revised version...if you choose to take my advice.