Review: Neither romantic nor comedic
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 15, 2011
After reading this very short story, I'm very confused about the "romantic comedy" description.  I didn't think it was either of those things.  Essentially, this is the story of a single woman who meets a man at a friend's housewarming party. They go on two dates, sleep together, have a misunderstanding, and make up.  It is extremely short and an easy read, but it could have been a sweet, romantic story if not for the following problems:1. The writing is annoying.  It's already been mentioned in previous reviews, so I won't go into details, but the tense shifts are distracting.2. The romance is not developed.  Yes, I know it's a short story and did not expect full character development, but we are left to accept too much.  For example, when Billy first touches Bree's hand, she gasps because she feels an "electric" current from  his touch.  He looks at her and says, "I know."  Really???3. For such a short story, and considering the lack of detail with respect to the developing romance, Bree's work is given quite a lot of focus.  Scenes describing her at work would have been put to better use revolving around the connection between Bree and Billy, which leads me to my next point.4. The night they meet, Billy and Bree spend a quiet hour at the lake.  They do not talk to one another at all.  And yet, Bree can't get him out of her mind.  They have only two more dates in the story.  Neither date is described in any detail other than their clothes and location.  Perhaps the reader would more easily accept an instant connection between the two characters if their dialogue was provided.5. The plot is formulaic.  Things are going well, then they sleep together, he doesn't call, and Bree finds him in a compromising position.  Of course, it's all a misunderstanding, but she refuses to accept his calls in the author's attempt to develop tension.  As we never felt an emotional connection with the characters, however, this attempt is ineffective.  The ending, though sweet, is rather cheesy.In short, it's not something I'll read again.  And if I knew Billy and Bree in real life, I'd give them 2 months, tops.