Review: Almost Finished
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 01 6, 2014
This is a simple and possibly too quick little story that is sadly predictable and only slightly unrealistic.  Perhaps the author would consider using this draft as the notes and outline and fleshing out the story and characters a bit more and adding some cliff edges for suspense.  The concept is a good one and what is written isn't poorly done, it's just not ... finished.