Review: Needs rewriting
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 23, 2012
I enjoy historical romance, and I liked this premise, but the execution was lacking. Too much of it was told about rather than shown, therefore, I never got close to the characters or in the action. Although the characters prayed, and God was mentioned, there was way too much cursing. The sex scenes were too descriptive, even though the consumated ones only came after marriage.In addition, there were many mistakes. A whole section is repreated out of order. When the characters are thinking in first person, saying "me" or "we," it's not marked in italics or noted in any way. There are typos, like "her" for "here," and grammatical errors, like "you shall." "Frog" was used for a Frenchmen, when that slang did not begin until toward the end of the the century and not in 1754. The writing was often choppy and the dialogue stilted, unnatural, and immature sounding. Sometimes the author used the old terms, like "tis" or "naught," and sometimes she used "it is" or "not" with the same speaker.I doubt Rebecca's adoptive mother would have left the hut and asked Daniel to care for Rebecca's snake wound overnight. Twice Rebecca accidentally found Daniel by wandering off with no idea where he was or where to go. I barely made it through the book and then wished I hadn't read it. It has promise but needs to be totally reworked.