Review: Mixed Feelings
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 06 9, 2014
I had a couple of issues with this one.First of all, the author uses the word 'lightning' as a verb at least twice in the story, and that irked me. Technically, you can use lightning as a verb, but it didn't work properly here.A few times the dialogue was rather unnatural, as well. A tip for any writer is to read their stuff out loud. How it sounds in your head and how it sounds when you say it are two very different things!For me, this story was a mix of sometimes not-great writing and a couple of genuinely creepy moments. I think the author has potential, and would definitely encourage him to keep working :)