Review: Great story, great character development, but needs some editing support
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 03 18, 2014
I am enjoying this series immensely.  I appreciate the complexity of the story, the various character perspectives and some really well-thought-out plot elements.  I also appreciate the consistency in details from other books in the series.  Nicely done!I believe the only constructive criticism I can offer about the story itself is that the dialog between some of the characters, such as Jeremy, Kevin, Katie, Ariel and others is a bit too juvenile for the age and education level these characters are meant to have.Also, as a dyslexic reader, I consider myself really lucky when I find a story I can really let myself get absorbed into, because I sometimes get jerked right out of the story when I hit a grammatical or spelling error.  This series of books has been difficult for me as there are many errors in the Kindle edition.  For example, in this book...."Karla hoped she that Admiral Streth understood the importance of what she was asking him to do.""We will try to blow throw them and get outside the planet's gravity well, ...""The Hocklyn flagship had escaped to spread work back to the Hocklyn Empire that humans had survived."Those are just thee examples of many.  I imagine many readers can read right over these mistakes and keep going, but I get stopped cold, pulled out of the story, put to work to decipher what is meant, and then I have to try to get absorbed again.