Review: good nub of a story, poor grammar bringing me out of the story.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 16, 2012
I really wish new writers would learn English before trying to write a story.  Every book has mistakes, but this is line after line and paragraph after paragraph.  He relies on spellchecker, but that is not going to give the difference between there, they're and their and all other words such as that.  Now, he may say that does not matter.  His teacher told him to just write the story and English did not matter.  S/he was WRONG!  Every time any such thing occurs, the reader is pulled out of the story-----to the great detriment of the plot and smooth flow of words.  It is too bad.  It has potential, but, well, edit, edit, and then, edit.  You will sell more books, thus, make more money so it is not trivial.