Review: urgh!
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 11 6, 2013
For a short story, it wasn't short enough. I really thought the idea behind this one was good but the ebonics and lingo gyrated on my nerves. After the "Eeks" and "Squeals" the story just became dumb and not so believable. It had potential but landed on my disliked shelf due to the immature actions of the girl. I don't know what it is, but when I read a 18+ mature adult story, I expect the characters to act that way too. If there is a flaw to this story it was the dialog being what pulled this story down. It made the characters unbelievable in their age and vocation. Not to my liking at all.