Review: A forced storyline
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 19, 2012
Shay is living in a world that is being run by Vampire's and Werewolve's.  The humans know they exist, and the two don't necessarily get along with one another.Shay, a "Healer", has spent her time looking for her mate.  The story begins with a prologue that gives us a brief insight into the world Shay is living in and the fact that she has spent all of her days searching the world for her mate.When the book begins, she finds her mate, who happens to be a vampire.  I won't give away much more than the synopsis itself gave us so as to not ruin the story for anyone who has not yet read it or who plans to.I thought the pretense for the story sounded like it would be good, but the way it was written and panned out did nothing to make it a worthwhile one to read.The interaction between Shay and Draven seems forced and ingenuine. I kept expecting for Draven to eventually turn on her because of it.  I would not go so far as to call their passion erotic, as, again, it seemed forced and also so fast that you may have actually missed it.While this is a short story, I still expect to understand who the characters are so that I can form some type of interest in them.  This story was lacking in that department.  I was at 70% on my Kindle and still had no idea what lineage Draven descended from.  At first he speaks proper english, uses a few English terms like "bloody hell", than refers to some slang sexual terms and endearments, then calls Shay a love name in French, etc.  Who is he?  English?  French?  American?  And he had a new term of endearment for her in every single sentence he spoke, from baby, my love, mi amore, darling, etc.  Not to mention the fact that everytime he speaks to her he begins each sentence with her name as though the reader has no idea who he is actually speaking to.  That part was a major annoyance.More than halfway through the story, a story which is originally being told by Shay, we switch over, very briefly, to hear the story in Draven's words.  I had to go back and read the chapter over again to make sure who was actually now speaking.All in all, this book had the potential for a good story, but the execution of it needed a lot of work (along with the editing).I originally gave my review a 1 star vote, but changed it to a 2 star for the simple reason that the story does pick up some once you reach the 70% mark, but in all honesty, especially with this being a short story, it should have been that fast paced from page 1.