Review: So much editing needed
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 02 12, 2014
I can look past some issues, but "passed" and "past" are not the same, nor is "ting" a substitute for "ring", just to name two examples. There is so much editing needed here. Missing punctuation makes it very hard to follow. Don't get me started on the run-on sentences. This story needs a lot of work before it is worth reading.