Review: Oh, dear...
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 01 30, 2013
I'm a bit surprised this isn't a first effort; yet, according to another reviewer, the writer has previous works. While the premise is good, the writing is littered with basic errors that make it very difficult to immerse yourself in the storyline. At the start of the story, it's quite apparent the main character's sister was originally called 'Amy', but the writer then gave that name to her best friend and called her 'Kiera', instead. No biggie, except she hasn't made the switch complete, so that sometimes you have 'Kiera' interacting with herself or in a place she couldn't possibly be, given previous information, because it's meant to be Amy. Annoying.The worst thing about this story, however, is that the writer commits a very basic error of technique in that she switches between points of view as the main characters are interacting. Very confusing and a very novice mistake. Add in the various commas that are sometimes ill-placed and, for me, it was just too distracting. I couldn't venture beyond the fourth chapter.I recommend a good editor provide assistance, post-haste, before the author tries to charge for this one.