Review: Needs an edit
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 08 9, 2012
The book needs a good edit; there are a lot of wrong words used, as well as one place where the pronouns change a she into a he. Also, one character goes from 10 years of service to 18 years of service in about five paragraphs. There is also a seeming disconnect between the number of Marines and the size of units; 81 effectives does not translate into 7 platoons. Auxiliary troops (pilots, etc) appear as needed without being accounted for. The back story and universe history is well developed and provides depth to the locale and behavior of the characters.That said, it's a fairly well executed futuristic military tale. I would say that there are no real surprises, other than that there are two groups of bad characters, and a more realistic social dynamic than usual. The characters don't really change or develop. The tale does end while leaving some room for further works.I got it while it was free; and it is a good read, a cu above a lot of the free stuff out there. A good clean up would serve it well. I've read commercially published books that were worse.