Review: No editing
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 01 22, 2012
Once again, what would be a great book has been ruined by errors.  I don't understand why so many kindle authors are unwilling to devote a few hours to polishing work they've invested so much time and emotion in!  It absolutely ruins the reading experience when you have to do double takes several times on each page.  Examples from a chapter: They pulling in the drive.... They were thinking the same think same thing.... Image what is waiting inside....  Constant errors like that are just inexcusable when the author is so obviously intelligent and talented.  Why be so lazy about something that means so much to you?  Ms. Loraine also follows in the steps of many kindle authors by providing very stilted and oddly formal dialogue.  It is, I will, You are, etc.  There's a serious lack of contractions.  People just don't speak that way.  If you truly felt comfortable with someone, would you really say, "I am so comfortable with you that it is like I have known you for all of my life."?  It just doesn't work having such formal dialogue matched with such informal characters.  Ms. Loraine, your story is captivating and creative.  I would be more than willing to volunteer to edit for free so your other readers and fans can truly enjoy the experience without constant distractions.