Review: Maybe it's just me, but I didn't like this
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 10 12, 2013
This started off very boring, with more telling than showing. I struggled to get to the 50% mark. There were just a lot of boring details, a tame and odd meeting of the two main characters, and hardly any sexual tension/chemistry to be felt between them at all. Then, we get to a sex scene that I would call only half-way decent as erotica. Has a bit of heat but only a little, in my opinion. Also, it has this odd vibe of non-con going on. One moment, the female lead is sick with fear or uncertainty, then she's all for it, very wishy-washy, and it wasn't the way I like to read D/s or non-con.I didn't believe this guy as a responsible dominant male, nor did I think this girl made a very good submissive. She seemed too weak, a real turn-off for me. She was a bit of a goof, just one mishap after another, and she came across as clueless. Who lets a strange guy tie her up and take photos during sex, without asking any questions about said photos? Who will see them? During this D/s scene, she is very weak and much too compliant about several things going on, and I think the author misses out on what a real submissive is like. The female lead did a lot of strange things, it seemed to me.All that, plus stilted writing and odd phrasing, some typos (most notably the male lead's name-- in the blurb his name is Travis, and in the book, it's Mark or Justin) and grammatical errors made this short story not work for me. As erotica, it's boring and not very smooth.