Review: A great premise for a short tale
Rating: 4 out of 5
Date: 05 17, 2014
I found some things in this short story very interesting. I loved the creativity displayed by the author. The various Steampunk inventions and magical workings were really cool. I also liked the way she created a dilemma for a magical dog and then made that dog into an integral character. I laughed very hard at one point when they were helping the dog, though I won't ruin the scene by talking about it. I will say it was a very comical moment.There were, however, a few things in this story that could use adjusting: Some of the dialogue felt artificial, like the author was trying to hard. It was great to see the wizard use fancy, long words, and I would expect it from them, but the character interaction was bogged down by some of it. Another small issue was that new items were invented, such as a "formal magic jacket," but they were never described. I expect this will be fixed in a new release/printing. I would like to see this story expanded more and I think it could definitely be a 5 star story with just a few adjustments.