Review: the third murderer
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 21, 2012
Guy and his wife go to funeral for a former friend of hers.  While visiting, another death occurs and they work with the newly appointed sheriff to solve the case.  The premise is interesting.  How and why the killings commit is good story groundwork.  In the right hands this tale could really shine.This story was tedious to read at times due to overwriting that was cumbersome and clumbsy to read.  There was an overabundance of redundant information (we are told Kyle is newly appointed sherriff over 5 times).  The meandering off case /topic into unnecessary details was distracting.  The numerous errors related to grammar and punctuation made reading stilted and gave some pretty unusual visuals (kyle wattling (google it) rather than waddling is just one example.  Another good one is :  woman neatly donning (donning means putting on - NOT ALREADY CLAD) a creased long black skirt, a white shirt, and a red apron - did she come to work naked that she needed to be dressing while approaching a table in restaurant?)Mrs. Hoff to go and find custodian for get help...Morgana was caught of guarded...I tried to piloted our talk...decided to just abandoned...soup of du jourand the starry eyed Hana to scampered off...There are literally errors every other page - though I will stop with examples here.wrong tenses used related to subject verb agreement, missing punctuation, over punctuation, incorrect punctuation usage (ellipsis), missing words, wrong words, wrong tenses, first person and third person switches...and on and on.  Coupled with the mellifluous writing, a plot that MIGHT be enjoyable is lost.I read in description bio this is a former teacher.  I suspect it was NOT an English teacher in any level school (elementary, middle or highschool).Not recommended (even for the merit premise wise) until or unless the author shows some rudimentary editing done as respect for his readers who he is expecting to pay for this.Christine