Review: Some very poor writing.
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 19, 2012
I'm just going to give some examples from the very short story (if it can be called that) and you draw your own conclusions."A deadly fright overcame her as she realized she could not breath and her lungs filled with water... To breath again was all that mattered.. The young woman felt the air leave her lungs""The young woman, uncertain which way would lead her to the surface, followed the bubbles of air escaping her lungs... The darkness was suffocating; it drove her mad... as black spider webs stole across her vision... The darkness grew deeper.""Zyra didn't need to see the patch over his right eye to recognize Captain Rador... Any man cruel enough to cut out his own eye couldn't be taken lightly...Rador said, his eyes narrowing even further."