Review: Too many adjectives!
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 02 16, 2014
This could have been so much better. I don't know anything about this author, so I don't know if it was her first book. If so, she has room to learn and improve.The story idea was decent, some of the writing was good. The execution needed a lot of work. She used far to many adjectives, especially when it came to the eyes. "her eyes shining in awe", "a mocking look in his eyes", "with a tortured sigh". While these types of sentences can give depth to a story, when such descriptive language is used multiple times in each paragraph it gets too flowery.Another issue I have is the cover and title. How embarrassing for anyone to see you carrying this around. It doesn't do the story any justice and could, in fact, scare some readers away. Yes, there are sex scenes. They are definitely not as X-rated as the cover and title would lead one to believe.I got this as a free download and, honestly, didn't know if I'd ever read it since the cover gave me the wrong impression. I'm glad I gave it a chance but feel the author needs to hone her writing skills.