Review: OK but confusing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 05 16, 2014
I like the concept and writing, mostly. The two things keeping me from giving more stars were the reversal of given and surnames. That added absolutely nothing to the story and I found it jarring to read. It was like hitting a visual pothole every time it occurred and I found myself re-reversing the names whenever they occured. Bothersome!Also, the lack of headings letting the reader know where and when the story was was taxing and confusing. A written story should flow smoothly no matter wwhere or when it goes. This one doesn't because I, for one, had to stop and regroup and (sometimes) guess where and when we were in the story and timeline.Put the names back in given/surname order familiar to Western readers and put headings to orient the reader to time and place every time you change directions/times and I'd give at least another star and a half. I don't think I'm being culturally insensitive feeling more comfortable with a Western order for names. In this internet day and age, I think Eastern readers would find Benidict Jack a strange way to put a Western name too.