Review: Editing please
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 03 29, 2013
I was trying to be hooked. I wanted to know about father in law and sunglasses man. I could not however get over the tense issues within the writing. Decide if you are going to be in the story or narrating it but not both in one sentence. I would live toread the story after it has been through another edit and the tense changes are corrected.