Review: Sorry to be a spoilsport
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 05 22, 2014
I did make myself finish this because I was hoping that once the writer got into it, it would improve.  The writer has some talent, but the actions/reactions/emotions are out of sequence and disjointed and the plot/premise not believable.  On the plus side, except for misuse of a few words (like headline for headlong), it is fairly free from typos.  I see the author has published about 15 books, but there is a real need to understand writing rules and do a bit more research about language of the times (expecting and pregnant, for instance).  But the main problem is the sequence of actions and feelings, which is very disjointed and motivations are never properly explained. And there is the issue of telling versus the proper showing.  These things the writer can learn, but needs to if she is serious about her career.