Review: Intriguing story, bad treatment.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 07 12, 2013
Disclosure: I received a copy of this ebook in exchange for a fair and honest review. So, here goes...I really wanted to like this. The conflicts our heroine faces -- the lure of her blood lust versus the love of her family and friends -- was a compelling draw for me. The story itself is intriguing and there were so, so many possibilities for exploration of her anguish and angst. These possibilities are never realized and that left me feeling a little cheated. In addition, the treatment this wonderful story received was sadly lacking. I wanted more introspection and less repetition. The conversations seem stilted and overwrought, and the fact that everything seems to work out so neatly really bothered me. There are myriad sentence fragments that make the reading feel choppy and stuttered. I think a major overhaul is in order to correct the grammatical errors -- the past tense of "drag" is "dragged", not "drug" -- and the story flow would benefit this work greatly. A professional editing job is in order and would make this wonderful story really pop.I wanted to give it three stars for the premise and one star for the actual writing; so I'm giving it an average of two stars. I'm sorry I couldn't do better.