Review: OK for a new author, BUT...
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 11 21, 2012
it needed a serious editing pass. Things a competent editor should have pointed out were still in there, so it reads like a second or third draft instead of a final novel.I loved the beginning up to the gate scene. Then she did a massive data dump for a SEVENTEEN YEAR OLD who was FACING DEATH. Really? No. Just, NO.  Data dumps are bad at the best of times but this one hit me like a slap in the face. Past that, the author needs some serious work on how to use commas and other punctuation, and she struggles with sound-alikes (to, too, two for example). She could use some brushing up on sentence structure, specifically where to break them. She had some weird run-ons and even weirder sentence breaks. Beyond the basic rules of writing so others can understand your story better, the story itself was OK. Some tropisms of the genre got dropped in without her actually understanding them (the difference between galaxies and star systems discussed in a previous review being a big one), but if you suspend that disbelief factor, she wrote a fairly tight explanation for her alien hero's desperation and "abduction" of the heroine, even if her heroine does just drop her objections and fears between one scene and the next. Literally. Oh, and seems to be content to drop her livelihood in favor of constant sex instead, while her hubby is home and then waiting with baited breath while he goes off to work. OK, I'd be cool with the first half, too, but the second would drive ME nuts, let alone an active, social person like Tink. The story needed a bit more work to get to a HEA.The saving grave for this book is her sense of humor and her voice. The characters and storyline are fun, and I'm willing to pick up the next book to see if she got better at her craft.