Review: Nothing special
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 13, 2012
I decided to download this story because it was free and I'm not quite so sold on the Erotica genre that I'm ready to spend more than a couple bucks on one of these.First of all, I'm not sure if it was just my kindle or what, but the first few pages had appropriate paragraph indentations then all of the sudden they were gone.  Everything was flush to the left side and it made it difficult to tell sometimes where one thought ended and another began.  There were also a few mix ups between his/hers he/she, etc.  While I don't mind some errors in a story these are actually pretty big mistakes to me.  When you're reading a story that is entirely about one guy and one girl then it's kind of important to use the correct word.I agree with some of the other reviewers that say they weren't sure where the comedy was in the story.  The only part I can think of would be the whole deal with the peanut butter, which is kind of lame.  I also don't understand the point of the title.  These characters were anything but hellraisers and to be honest I found the whole thing to be pretty vanilla.I also didn't feel a strong connection to either character and I felt like it was a pretty big jump to go from "I can't get into a relationship because I've got crap to get over" to "I need to extend my lease to 50 years".  I'm so sure you've learned enough about each other, through only a few (not so steamy) sexual encounters, to be able to make a decision on whether to be together *eyes rolling*.  Not even the sex was that great to make me feel like I could get over the lack of a plot or storyline.Overall this story was OK but if you're looking for something that's a little more fun with a better plot try reading Teasing Trent.  Much funnier and more erotic.