Review: Reads like a teenager wrote it for their friends.
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 09 19, 2011
With the exception of the fact there was a brief sex scene and the heroine Ally was in her mid-twenties I would have thought this story was teen fan fiction written for their friends. This is a perfect example of a story, which is in dire need for an editor.  If it hadn't been free I would have been very upset.The typos and grammar errors were too numerous to count. Not to mention missing dialolgue tags and thoughts not being properly marked as such. It made the whole story look unprofessional and confusing to read.Getting past the errors I think this could be a decent story. It just needs a lot of work.