Review: Terrible
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 01 3, 2012
This pathetically short story has a lot of problems. Not just incorrect word choice. One doesn't bundle into someone, for example. But general lack of research and care taken by the author. Her description of water sports, the lead and what he does to her are not particularly graphic, there is no emotional connection nor did I feel the character's struggle of enjoying it and not enjoying it. Honestly, I feel like the author needs to read more smut and then get an editor and then publish.Sloppy, short and not particularly passionate.