Review: Bad writing.
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 02 10, 2013
I have to be honest. I expected something good about this book based on the reviews here on Amazon. When I finished the book, I had no idea what everyone else saw, because I certainly was not seeing or feeling the erotic undertones there.The storyline was good. But the writing killed it bad. This isn't to say that the author can't write, because I think there's something there. While it was okay, it was not fluid enough. To begin with, there were typos and lapses in POV. One moment she's describing what's happening and what she's feeling. In the next she's being referred to in the third person. That was very distracting.Another thing about it is that there are TOO MANY DETAILS. Details like how they kissed and whose tongue went where and where whose hands went where and how he unhooks her bra and how she slides it down her arms. Those aren't bad things in erotica, but they must be handled with enough skill to make the images convey not only the act, but the feeling as well. This is where the author fails.It was like a bad game of Show and Tell, except that this was all Telling and no Showing. In some parts it really went, "I did this. And then next I did this. And then I did this, this and this." It was like reading about how to proceed during sex. All Tell, No Show. Good erotica is supposed to take the reader not only into the bedroom, but also into the hearts and souls and bodies of the characters in the bedroom. This one was so badly written it felt like I was sitting at the corner of the room watching two people figure out what to do during sex.To be honest, I don't think there was much depth to the writing. It felt forced, like all the time the author was writing she was conscious that it had to be erotic so we are bombarded with erotic images. But the depth of the feeling wasn't there. Like I said, too many details, not enough emotion which is the clincher in erotica. We need not only to be able to see the lovers touching. We need to feel it too. And unfortunately, this book fails on that score.NOT RECOMMENDED.