Review: only read 11%
Rating: 2 out of 5
Date: 02 19, 2013
The writing is awkward.  He needs to work on his descriptions.  He crams in too many.  He especially needs to watch the contradictions and redundancies.  I also think he needs to ease up on the onomatopoeia- it gets cheesy really fast and it can take us out of the experience when it doesn't match up with how we'd describe it.