Review: nightmare is right - but for wrong reasons
Rating: 1 out of 5
Date: 06 30, 2012
This is a short horror piece.  It would not be half as long as it is if the author did not continuously repeat tedious, descriptive detail.  The author is STILL describing the MC after the 70% mark.  Past description of mild mannered pushover and current (within text) primal force driven sociopath.  Same exact descriptions over and over and over and over.  In the beginning 25% we get a description of Bob (with no changes in words or details) every other page.  Pretty sure Bob would have sufficed as detail since his murders showed his mindset to the reader.This amateur attempt was presented in horrible format related to punctuation and grammar.  Wrong words, missing words, missing punctuation, punctuation used incorrectly.  Dialogue bits of two talkers in one paragraph (no no).  First person switched to third person within paragraph.  Tense switches from past to present within a sentence. There is NOT ONE SINGLE PAGE/LOCATION without errors (many times several).  I do not believe a spell or grammar check run.Suspension issues - there is no way Karl lasted a week in captivity with injuries described without medical intervention.  Several injuries of major breaks would have festered, caused septsis and - or celluloisis (untreated would have caused shock) .  But, say forgive for genre (okay) .  The coupe de gras injury would have done him in within very few minutes.  That is not one that can be ignored (even for genre).  Is a partial lift from Misery by Stephen King without the acumen to address the major artery issues that King was wise enough to address.  It is physically impossible to live without a minimum of a tourniquet of some sort to manage the injury.  Genre does NOT allow suspension of such magnitude.The tale is poorly constructed, poorly written and not worth the "paper" it is written on, or the time spent to read.Christine