Review: Could use some editing
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 07 31, 2013
I have to say I'm surprised by all the five star reviews. Don't get me wrong, this is a cute story and I love the setting, but I feel it could have used some editing. I found a lot of run on sentences and commas being abused left and right. Quite a few of the paragraphs felt very repetitive as though the author couldn't decide which description she liked best so she chucked them all in there. I'm not usually such a stickler on free downloads, but for such a short story, it would have shined with some heavy handed pruning.