Review: Too jumbled & back and forth
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 12 11, 2013
The author does a time jump right towards the beginning. I know it's a short story so you could at least go in chronological order. That's what a prologue is for. It would have made more sense to have what happened 5 years to be done first. The characters were likeable but the jumbledness of it just made it okay and not good.Not to mention that the ending just cut off. I know the author states that it was printed in a large anthology volume of romantic stories first. But if you are going to publish it by itself, it should go through another editing process to see if it makes sense to sell by itself.