Review: Really Good Story Could Have Been Better
Rating: 3 out of 5
Date: 10 17, 2013
I would have given this one a five star review if the author had not wore me out with repetitive dialogue. I appreciate her interest in building chemistry and not just zooming to sex. However she accomplished the chemistry and should have allowed Kerrigan the opportunity to explore her sensuality with Axel. Axel was great and enormously patient with Kerrigan who wasn't' exactly likable and oddly flakey, and the author trying to pass her off as a virgin really didn't help. Plus the author had implied a kind of worldliness about her that I was hard pressed to believe she actually uttered the words "it won't fit" I had to roll my eyes. I realize there is a part two story, so I hope Kerrigan matures enough to be deserving of Axel. I think this author could become one of my favorites, but not so much with dragged out often unnecessary dialogue and women characters who are annoying.