is there any mistakes in this story The Magic Stone
Chapter 1: the secret rebellion
This story starts with a rebel named Seymour; he hates the Shah Empire a brutal empire that suppresses everybody who is against them the Shah Empire wants every planet in there system including Seymour´s home planet of Salukamie. The Shah has a stone that gives the most power in the world, they found it on the planet of Krystosis (as it is the only planet that has that rock), but the Shah mined it so much there almost no minerals and people, the population of Krystosis used the be 1.3 million people and now its roughly about 230 thousand people, the reason is because the Shah used toxic gas to mine the stones . Seymour’s friend died in a small uprising too. Seymour gathered a bunch of other rebels and had about 200 he planned to attack the Shah base about 45 minutes away the Shah troops have white amour and helmets that fully covered their head. As Michoud be hard, but they tried it they killed about 30 Shah troopers, and they lost 3 rebels in the end after fighting hard they won the base, but not for long because the reinforcements had arrived so they gathered as much intel as they could and fled. Seymour and half of the rebel forces fled to the nearby forest, but the other half were captured and imprisoned or were executed. Seymour did not know what to do, half of his forces were in the hands of the Shah, and he knew he could not fight the troops approaching so they ran through the forest and found a broken-down ship, ´´we could restart it. ´´ Thought Hans who was Seymour’s old friend, they got in the ship and started the restarting process and while they were waiting the Shah troops were edging ever so closer and about an hour later they got the ship to restart and took off, but while they were taking off a Shah trooper (A.K.A Core Troopers) shot the ships rear engine resulting in a huge fuel leak which would only allow them to go 100 miles before crashing. Meanwhile the Shah emperor was fuming with rage, he was mad because the intel they gathered were prison codes, codes for safes filled to the brim with credits, gold and diamonds, their new weapon the d5 and the planets government systems and most importantly it showed where the magic stone was. This was a huge win for the rebels and they did not know it yet because they were trying to fix the gas leak in the engine but they knew they could not stop the leaking and soon they would crash into uncharted territory or worse in the capital Wolnosc and they would kill millions along with themselves, so they devised a plan to crash In a field and empty plot of land but they would not know the Automatic System Navigator or A.S.N would direct them towards the planets third largest city Mehv they would kill thousands of people if they crashed there so they all ejected.

Chapter 2 the Hunt for Civilization 
They ejected into uncharted territory, but they realized that they were also unable to reach Hans and his men who forgot to eject and were still in the plane but after about 5 minutes they saw Hans and his men ejecting in the, but a horrifying cite they saw was one of the people ejecting split in two bye the ships engine. Hans and his men grouped up with Seymour and his men to cross the Toplu river it was hard, but they made it across that river was the only charted area there. They continued walking and walking and walking until they arrived at a small village called Torrot they eat food slept then left by foot towards Mehv now they were in charted territory Seymour spotted some Core troopers and with the help of Hans they knocked them out and all of them ran towards Mehv. At Mehv they saw tons of Core troopers surrounding the emperors Hallot’s palace while they were gone the emperor died and left the thrown to his son Hegy who ordered the minority race called the Kar and imprisoned them and\or killed them. They immediately went into hiding. Seymour was shocked as they ran through the city, he felt sad almost all his friends were Kar and if they died, he would be sadder. He kept his tears to himself and while the other men ran for shelter, he handpicked three men including him to sneak into the new emperor palace and kill him during his coronation they somehow snuck in and were getting prepared to shoot the emperor, but their gun jammed.  Seymour did not know what to do as the Core troopers were sprinting towards him, he hid in the roof, and after a while he came out and made a run for it. Luckly, he made it out alive along with Hans and they went searching for their team, but they disappeared…?


Last Chapter: the final stand:3

They searched and searched but they could not find them, then Seymour came to the realization that they were captured or dead. Seymour, who still wanted to find them, convinced Hans to come with him and they went on an expedition to find the rest of their crew. They first checked the outskirts of town maybe they ran there so they could not get caught by the Core troopers they searched they were not there then the town center was next, they looked all through the town center but did not find them but in the corner of their eye they saw a fort and made their way there. They sneaked past the guards and made it inside now they were gone to find what prison they were in, then Seymour and Hans both said ``WOW! `` because it was impossible to find their crew because the info said there was about 10,000 prisoners, but luckily they tricked a guard wearing there uniform by saying ``where are the rebels located`` the guard said `` there located at prison 101 and 102`` they rush to that room and unlocked it and the crew came out now they all made their way out of the prison and towards Hegy´s palace they sneaked into there and found the magic stone so they quickly snatched it. But the Core troopers immediately noticed and started running towards them but before they could Seymour threw it on the ground and it shattered, everyone was in disbelief. ``Is it still usable? ` `asked Hans ``I don’t think so`` said Seymour. At that point the Core troopers, Seymour and Hans were frozen in place for Seymour and Hans they worked countless years on end to preserve these rocks for the troopers they had mined countless years on end to get this rock and now it was broken. After they all snapped out of its Seymour and Hans that made a run for it as the Core troopers were running behind them trying to catch them, they ran and ran until Hans remembered he had a pistol and used it against the Core troopers as they fell to the ground a ship suddenly arrived and Seymour and Hans realized that it was there crew and they boarded now there mission was to destroy this fort and the palace first it was going to be the fort so Seymour came up with a plan but bombs in the fuel storage at the bottom so they did that by jumping down through a little hatch and as soon as the two people assigned to that mission boarded the ship again they exploded the fort as it burst into flames. Next was the palace and he made this one special since he hated Hegy who imprisoned his friends, so he decided to do this one himself as he set bombs around the palace and to a sneak peak inside to make sure Hegy was there and blew it up ``Hegy surely died` `he thought to himself as all the Core troopers started to shut down? Yes, your heard me shut down it could not be possible then he realized that when Hans and himself froze because the stone broke the only reason the core troopers might have frozen is because they were attached to the stone it was like a brain but then he realized that the other stone was in the palace. After this event Seymour freed all of the Kar and they lived together as there was a presidential election and Seymour won it as he would  enjoy his place and they all lived 







happily, ever after. THE END. 

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