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  1B	
  Writing
Portfolio	
  Portfolio Entry #1	
  	
  Choose  one  topic  and  write  about  it.  Be  sure  to  use  complete  sentences  and  use  paragraph  style.  
	  A. What	  did	
  you	  do	
  over	  summer	  break?	
  	
  Where	  did	
  you	
  go?	
  Who	
  did	
  you	  go	
  with?	
  What	  was	
  your	  	
   best	  memory?	
  	
  	
  
B. 	
   What	  do	
  you	
  wish	  you	
  did	
  over	  summer	  break?	
  	
  What	  plans	
  would	
  you	  have	  m ade	  if	
  you	
  could	
  	
   have	
  done	  anything?	
  	
  W here	
  would	
  you	  have	  gone?	
  Who	
  would	
  you	
  want	  to	
  go	
  with?	
  	
  	
  
C. 	
   Is	  it	
  better	
  to	
  work	  during	
  summer	  break	  or	
  have	  a	
  lot	  of	
  free	  time?	
  Give	  reasons	
  for	
  your	  answer.	
  

	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
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A. Do	
  you	
  think	
  professional	
  athletes	
  receive	
  too	  much	  money?	
  Why	  or	
  why	  not?	
  B. A	
  year	  of	
  high	  school	
  in	
  America	
  lasts	
  from	  September	
  to	
  May	
  with	  a	
  3-­‐month	
  summer,	  while	  a	
  Japanese	
  school	
  year	  starts	
  in	
  April	  and	
  ends	  in	
  March.	
  	
  Which	  do	
  you	  prefer,	  starting	
  school	
  in	
  September	
  or	
  in	
  April?	
  C. Have	
  you	
  ever	  had	  an	
  argument	
  with	  your	  parents?	
  	
  Write	
  about	
  a	
  time	  when	
  you	  disagreed	
  
with	
  an	
  older	  family	
  m ember.	
  	
  What	  was	  the	
  argument	
  about?	
  What	  happened?	
  In	
  the	
  end,	
  did	
  you	
  win	  the	
  argument?	
  

	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  

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   questions	
  below	
  in	
  complete	
  sentences.	
  	
  When	
  you	
  finish,	
  combine	
  your	  sentences	
  into	
  a	
  paragraph	
  below.	
  	
  	
  
Answer	  the	
  
	
  1.	
  Do	
  you	
  think	
  Japan	
  should	
  allow	
  more	  immigrants	
  into	  the	
  country?	
  Why	  or	
  why	  not?	
  	  	
  _____________________________________________________________________________________________	  	
  _____________________________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  
	
  2.	
  Why	  do	
  you	
  believe	
  your	  opinion?	
  Give	  3	
  reasons	
  why	  or	
  why	  not	  Japan	
  should	
  allow	
  more	  immigrants.	
  	
  Also,	  provide	  support	
  	
  for	
  each	  reason.	
  
	
  
i.	
  	
  Reason:	
  _____________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  
	
  	
  	
  	
  
	
  	
  	
  	
  Support:	
  ____________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  
i.	
  	
  Reason:	
  _____________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  
	
  	
  	
  	
  	
  Support:	
  ____________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  	
  
	
  
i.	
  	
  Reason:	
  _____________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  	
  
	
  	
  	
  	
  	
  Support:	
  ____________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  
our	
  friend	
  disagrees	
  with	  you!	
  What	  might	
  your	  friend	
  say?	
  (Give	
  one	
  reason	
  AGAINST	
  your	  own	
  opinion.)	
  	
  
	
  3.	
  Yはんたいいけん	
  「反対意見」______________________________________________________________________________	
  	
  _____________________________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  
はんろん
	
  4.	
  How	
  would	
  you	
  reply	
  to	
  your	  friend	
  in	
  #3?	  (Tell	
  why	  the	
  opposite	
  opinion	
  is	
  weak	  or	
  not	
  good?	
  「 反 論 する」	  
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  _____________________________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  5.	
  Overall,	
  what	  is	
  your	  main	  opinion	
  again?	
  (RESTATE	  your	  original	
  opinion	
  from	  #1)	  	  _____________________________________________________________________________________________	
  
	
  
	
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(100 words)

A. Have	
  you	
  heard	  of	
  “herbivore	
  men”?	
  Herbivore	
  men	
  (草食(系)男子,	
  Sōshoku(-­‐kei)	
  danshi)	
  or	
  grass-­‐eaters	
  are	  a	
  social	
  phenomenon	
  in	
  Japan	
  of	
  men	
  who	
  shun	
  marriage	
  or	
  gaining	
  a	
  girlfriend.	
  	
  What	  is	
  your	  opinion	
  about	  them?	
  	
  Have	  Japanese	
  men	
  changed	
  over	  time?	
  Give	  three	
  reasons	
  for	
  your	  opinion.	
  
B. J-­‐pop	
  and	
  Enka	  are	  the	  major	
  types	  of	  music	
  genres	  in	
  Japan.	
  	
  Which	
  genre	  do	
  you	
  think	
  better	  represents	
  Japanese	
  culture?	
  	
  What	  are	
  three	  reasons	
  for	
  your	  opinion?	
  

	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  

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FREEWRITING.	
  Write	  a	
  paragraph	
  about	
  any	
  topic	
  that	  you	
  want.	
  	
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A. What	
  is	
  the	  best	  age	  to	
  get	
  married?	
  	
  Do	
  you	
  think	
  that	  there	  is	  a	
  different	
  standard	
  for	  men	
  and	
  women?	
  	
  Has	  the	
  average	
  age	  of	
  marriage	
  in	
  Japan	
  changed	
  over	  time?	
  	
  What	  do	
  you	
  think	
  about	
  it	
  and	
  what	  age	  do	
  you	
  think	  you	
  will	  get	
  married?	
  	
  W hy?	
  	
  (If	
  you	
  don’t	
  think	
  about	
  m arriage	
  or	
  don’t	
  want	  to	
  get	
  m arried,	
  please	
  tell	
  why?)	
  	
  (Give	  three	  reasons	
  for	
  your	  opinion.)	
  
B. Same-­‐sex	
  marriage	
  is	
  a	
  controversial	
  topic	
  around	  the	
  world.	
  	
  While	  gay	
  couples	
  can	
  get	
  married	  in	
  England,	
  Canada,	
  most	  of	
  Europe,	
  and	
  some	  states	
  in	
  A merica,	
  other	
  countries	
  forbid	  gay	
  marriage	
  and	
  even	
  punish	  or	
  kill	  gay	
  people.	
  	
  First,	  what	  is	
  same-­‐sex	
  marriage?	
  	
  
Do	
  you	
  agree	  or	
  disagree	
  with	  it?	  	
  Should	
  same-­‐sex	
  marriage	
  be	
  allowed	
  in	
  Japan?	
  (Give	
  three	
  reasons	
  for	
  your	  opinion.)	
  

	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  

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Choose	  one	
  topic	
  and	
  white	  a	
  paragraph.	
  	
  Use	  the	
  topic	
  as	
  your	  first	  sentence.	
  	
  Give	  three	  causes	
  OR	
  effects	
  for	  the	
  topic	
  that	  you	
  choose.	
  	
  
A.	
  Smart	  phones	
  have	  had	  several	
  important	
  effects	
  on	
  society.	
  
B.	
  	
  The	  typhoon	
  caused	
  several	
  problems	
  in	
  our	
  town.	
  C.	
  	
  American	
  culture	
  has	
  spread	
  around	  the	
  world.	
  	
  There	  are	  many	  causes	
  for	
  this.	
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FREEWRITING!	
  	
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  A. Bullying	
  is	
  a	
  serious	
  problem	
  in	
  Japan.	
  	
  Sometimes	
  it	
  leads	
  to	
  depression	
  and	
  sometimes	
  it	
  leads	  to	
  suicide.	
  	
  First,	  what	  is	
  bullying?	
  	
  Have	  you	
  seen	  or	  do	
  you	
  know	
  examples	  of	
  bullying	
  from	  your	  school	  life?	
  	
  How	
  does	  a	
  person	
  who	  is	
  being	  bullied	
  feel?	
  	
  Last,	
  what	  are	
  ways	  that	  we	
  can	
  stop	  bullying?	
  	  (200	
  words)	
  
B. Have	
  you	
  ever	  bullied	  or	
  helped	
  friends	
  bully	
  someone?	
  	
  Why	
  did	
  you	  do	
  it?	  	
  What	  actions	
  did	
  you	  do?	
  	
  What	  did	
  other	
  people	  do	
  when	
  they	  saw	  the	
  bullying	
  happen?	
  	
  How	  do	
  you	
  think	
  the	
  bullied	
  person	  felt?	
  	
  If	
  you	
  could	
  apologize	
  to	
  that	  person,	
  what	  would	
  you	
  say?	
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	  Complete	  the	
  sentence	
  and	
  write	  a	
  paragraph	
  about	  the	
  topic.	
  	
  Tell	  me	
  as	
  much	  information	
  about	  the	
  topic	
  as	
  you	
  know.	
  	
  

	
  

	
  	
  

Unique	  and	
  Mysterious	
  Japan	
  

	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  

(200 words)“Japan	  has	  many	  unique	
  points.	
  	
  It	
  is	
  an	
  ancient	
  country	
  with	  a	
  unique	
  culture.	
  	
  There	  is	
  one	  part	  of	
  Japanese	
  culture	
  that	  is	
  unknown	
  and	  very	  mysterious	
  to	
  foreigners.	
  	
  This	  part	  of	
  Japanese	
  culture	
  is	
  called	
  ___________	  in	
  Japanese.	
  	
  In	
  English,	
  it	
  means	
  ___________.”	
  	
  	
  

	
  
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  the	  Introduction	
  above]	
  

	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
	
  
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1B

Class:

Unit Focus Chart
Unit

1
2
3
4
5

1A

1B

2A

2B

Punctuation.
Run-on sentences.
Sentence fragments.
Missing Words.
Singular/plural nouns.
Quantifier + s/es.
Subject-verb
agreement.
Word choice.
Word form.

Misplaced commas.
Independent/dependent clauses.
Comma splices.
Irregular plural nouns.
Common mistakes withnouns.

Commas.
“Because.”
Contractions.
Sentence fragments.
Singular/plural nouns.
Subject-verb
agreement.

Word choice.
Word form.
Articles (a, an, the)Verb tense (present vs.
present continuous).

Commas.
“Because.”
Contractions.
Sentence fragments.
Irregular singular andplural nouns.
Subject-verb
agreement.
Word choice.
Word form.
Word order.
Pronoun agreement.
Articles (a, an, the).

Review of all editing
symbols.

Verb tense (irregular).
Prepositions (time).

Review of all editing
symbols.

Pronoun agreement.
Verb tense (simple past,present, future)
Prepositions (location/transportation).

Word choice.
Word form.
Infinitives vs. Gerunds
Verb tense (passive).
Irregular verb forms.

Correction Symbols
SYMBOLMEANINGSYMBOLMEANINGppunctuation

wf

wrong formΛ

missing word

wwwrong wordcap

capitalizationwo

wrong word ordervt

verb tense

prep

preposition

s/v

subject-verb agreementart

articlecombinepron

pronoun agreementspspelling

conconnectors/plsingular or pluralreprepetitionX

unnecessary word?

I don’t understand!

Indentparagraph

Connect toprevious sentence¶Start newparagraph

Editing and Grammar Practice

1B
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Unit 1

FOCUS: Commas. Independent/dependent clauses

A. Sentence Activity

p cap

Correct the sentences below. Underline and place correction symbols above each mistake.
Use the correction symbols in the box to the right. Symbols may be used more than once.

1. Its not polite to eat with your mouth open. (1 mistake)
2. Because it’s a holiday, she will go to the bakery get a haircut and go to the park. (2 mistakes)
3. The dog played with it’s toys all morning. For example, a ball and a rope. (3 mistakes)
4. I often like to read at a cafe. Because its quiet and the atmosphere is comfortable. (4 mistakes)
5. Second Asuka loves to go to the park because she can run free, and play on the swing set. (2 mistakes)

B. Paragraph Editing (10 mistakes)

Correct the paragraph below. First, underline and place correction symbols above themistakes, then rewrite the paragraph to correct any mistakes. Use the correction
symbols in the box to the right. Symbols may be used more than once.

p cap sp

Daisuke has been applying for full–time jobs in Osaka, and Kyoto. Last week, he received a callfrom a computer company in tokyo. They asked Daisuke to fry to Tokyo for a job interview. Daisuke
agreed to go to the interview. Because the company offered to pay for Daisuke’s airplane ticket. Since
then, Daisuke has been busy collecting informaton about the company. Next he also went shopping for
a new suite. Also, Daisuke has been rehearsing for the interview, because he wants to do his best,
impress the company and get a job. Hes looking forward to working at a new place.
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Unit 2

Editing and Grammar Practice

1B

FOCUS: Irregular plural nouns. Common mistakes with nouns.

A. Sentence Activity
Correct the sentences below. Fill in the blanks with the singular or plural nouns and the correct verb agreement.

1. The animals ( was / were ) taken to the farm in two ( vehicle / vehicles ).
2. In the summer, I love eating ( fruit / fruits ), but in the winter I prefer ( vegetable / vegetables ).
3. I must win two (match / matches ) before I can get a trophy.
4. Three years ( is / are ) a long time to not buy new (cloths / clothes ).
5. She ( like / likes ) Aoto and Mari. They are very generous ( person / persons / people ).

B. Paragraph Editing (12 mistakes)

Correct the paragraph below. First, underline and place correction
symbols above the mistakes, then rewrite the paragraph to correct
any mistakes. Use the correction symbols in the box to the right.
Symbols may be used more than once.

s/v s/pl sp p cap

Since I was a little girl, I have always loved science-fiction movie. There are several reason that I
likes them. First I have always been interested in the future. I love to imagine what the future will be
like. Will it be a wonderful utopia or a nightmare filled with scary alien? My second reason is, because I
love technologies. Sci-fi is full of robots, spaceships, and computer. Finally, I think sci-fi is great because
it is full of imagination. Of course, all movies and TV shows is creative. But I love seeing lives and worldsthat only ekzist in the imagination. To me, science-fiction is the best movie genre.

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1B

Editing and Grammar Practice

FOCUS: Word choice. Word form. Articles (a, an, the)A. Sentence Activity
Correct the sentences below. Choose the correct words to complete the sentences OR correct the underlined words.

1. I like to walking in the park because it helps me clear my mind. ( _____________________ )2. The ( scary / scared ) part of the ride ( scary / scared ) all the children at the party.
3. My friends and I love ride the roller coasters at the theme park. ( _____________________ )4. The students were ( exited / exciting ) about the ( interested / interesting ) events at the festival.
5. Eat onions, to watching scary movies, and bugs are the things I hate. ( ________________ / _________________ )B. Paragraph Editing (10 mistakes)
Correct the paragraph below. First, underline and place correction symbols
above the mistakes, then rewrite the paragraph to correct any mistakes. Use thecorrection symbols in the box to the right. Symbols may be used more than once.

ww
Λ

wf

s/pl

p
sp x

I have travelled to many interested countries around the world. While all of them are exciting tovisit, I have three favorite country. The first country, is Thailand. It is one of my favorites because of thebeaches and the mountains. I like to swimming at the beach and ride elephants in the mountains.
Besides Thailand I also like India. The food in India is my favorite cuisine. Everything is dericious, forexample, the curries, the breads, and the yogurt lassies. Last, I love go to Jordan. Besides the natureand the food, I am amazing at the landmarks and the desserts. Petra is my favorite World Heritage Site.
That is why I love Thailand, India, and Jordan.
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Unit 4

Editing and Grammar Practice

1B

FOCUS: Verb tense (present vs. present continuous)

A. Sentence Activity
Correct the sentences below. Write the correct form of the verb in the blanks to complete the sentences.

1. The house _________ _______________ 100 years ago.

(build)2. After all the goals ____________ _________________, the game was ___________________.

(miss, lose)

3. Hundreds of languages ___________ ___________________ at the United Nations every day.

(speak)4. You can’t enter now; the office _________ ______________ _________________ at the moment.

(clean)5. Don’t worry about the money, the car _________ ______________ _________________ now.

(sell)

6. My favorite coffee cup ___________ _________________ by the dog yesterday.

(broke)B. Paragraph Editing (11 mistakes)
Correct the paragraph below. First, underline and place correction symbols
above the mistakes, then rewrite the paragraph to correct any mistakes. Use thecorrection symbols in the box to the right. Symbols may be used more than once.

vt

Λ wf conx pron s/pl art
s/pl

sp

The best experience of my life happen last summer. For three months, I studied abroad in

Florida, U.S.A. I really had a great time in Florida, I did many amazed things. One of the thing I did was
to swimming with dolphins. It was very cute. Next, I really enjoyed my host family. A family consisted ofa father, a mother, and two twin girls. My breakfast and dinner maked everyday by father. Everyone
were so kind. Another good experience was seeing the original Florida State Capitol Building. It wasbuild in 1845. Overall, I had a great time in Florida.
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Unit 5

Editing and Grammar Practice

1B

FOCUS: Review of all the symbols

Correct the paragraphs below. First, underline and placecorrection symbols above the mistakes, then correct the
mistakes. Use any of the correction symbols in the box tothe right. Some symbols may be used more than once or
not at all.

p Λ caps/pl x wf
art pron

vt
ww
con

s/v
sp
wo prep
rep

A. Paragraph 1 (15 mistakes)
My trip to the United States were big shock. One day, my mother said, “Go and pack your cloths.
We are going to New York tomorrow, and they are going to live there.” The news was a complete
surprise to me. I went to my room and sit on the bed for a long time. After that I called my best friend
and telled him a news. The next morning, my mother and I got on a airplane in eight 0’clock. I
remember sitting next to the window, and looking down on my City. I was scared. Because I didn’tknow my future. My life charged overnight. I never forget that trip.

B. Paragraph 2 (14 mistakes)
In my opinion, violent video games is harmful to young children. First studies show that playing
these games cause changes in the behavior of young people. According to researchers, playing thesegames after, young people have more more angry feelings. In addition, players get into fights at
school. Players have arguments with they teachers. _ Second reason is that violent video games makeyoung people less sensitive too violence in the world. I beleive that games make it entertaining toshoot and kill. Childs may forget the line between fantasy and reality. Lastly, these types of games
teach children that it is ok to use vilence to solve their problem. Violence is never the solution.
Therefore, violent games are not for young people, and it should be banned.

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Matthew	
  Barbee,	
  Kwansei	
  Gakuin,	  2014