Revising and editingYou have written paragraphs very quickly.

Every paragraph could always be better.

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After you write, read what you wrote and think
about how it could be better.
Write it again with those changes.

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Minor revisions: Sometimes you just need to fix
small mistakes or add more information.
Major revisions: Sometimes you need to go
back to the thinking and organizing to make theparagraph clearer or more complete.
After you revise, read it again.

Grammar is the least important thing, but do fix
mistakes if you find them.

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You can make pie if you follow some steps.
First, make the crust. Combine flour with butterand water. Be careful not to stir too much. Next,choose the filling. Apples, strawberries, orrhubarb are all tasty fillings. Finally, bake the pie
in the oven at 170⁰ for 40 minutes. You will know
it is done when the crust is golden brown.

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How many steps?
You can make pie if you follow some steps. First,
make the crust. Combine flour with butter and water.
Be careful not to stir too much. Next, choose the filling.
Apples, strawberries, or rhubarb are all tasty fillings.
Finally, bake the pie in the oven at 170⁰ for 40 minutes.
You will know it is done when the crust is goldenbrown.
What do I do withthe filling?

How much of each
ingredient?

Maybe I should add other kinds, likecream pies or meat pies, too.

Revising: Minor revisions
You can make pie if you follow three steps.
First, make the crust. Combine 150 grams of flourwith 100 grams of butter and 30cc water. Be
careful not to stir too much. Next, choose thefilling. Apples, strawberries, or rhubarb are all
tasty fillings. Slice the fruit, mix it with sugar, andput it into the crust. Finally, bake the pie in theoven at 170⁰ for 40 minutes. You will know it isdone when the crust is golden brown.

Revising: Major revisions
oThink• Apple pie• Four steps

oOrganize

Same order, butmore detailoRe-writeoRevise again if necessary

It took four tries
to revise this.

Revising: Major revisions
You can prepare a delicious apple pie if you follow
these four steps. First, make the crust. Combine 150
grams of flour with 100 grams of butter and 30cc
water. Roll the dough into a thin sheet and put it in apie pan. Next, peel five or six apples and slice theminto thin pieces. After the apples are sliced, mix themin a large bowl with 150 grams of sugar and 10grams of cinnamon. Gently spoon the apple mixture
into the crust. The last step it to bake the pie in theoven at 170⁰ for 40 minutes. When the crust is brown
and the apples are soft, remove the pie from theoven and let it cool for 15 minutes.

“Clean copy”
You may need to revise and rewrite severaltimes.
When you can't improve anymore, prepare a“clean copy”.
Only your final paragraph – no notes, earlyversions, or other writing – should be on thepage.
Neatness counts.

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Revising tips
• Remember, someone else (not just you) will
read what you wrote.
• Your goal is to communicate your ideas. Does
this paper succeed at that goal?
• Try to imagine someone reading the paper. Is
there anything she or he might find unclear,
distracting, or not completely explained?
• This is the hardest part of revising: trying to imagine
what someone else will think about your ideas.