Academic English: Intermediate

Milkweed for monarchs• Watch: https://youtu.be/q15DioqeAe0• Why do people who like butterflies plantmilkweed in their gardens?
• Why is African Milkweed sometimes called“hairy balls”?
• What are the steps to grow milkweed?

Writing essays• The paragraph is the basic unit of academic
writing.
– If you can write a good paragraph, you can write
other things.
– If you cannot write a paragraph, you will not beable to write other things.

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Topic sentence
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Concluding sentence.

 Unity Coherence• (Introduction paragraph)states the main idea
supports the topic
supports the topic
supports the topic
summarizes the support or
restates the topic
only one topic
sentences fit together

Topic sentence• Gives the topic (main idea)– Specific enough to describe completely– General enough to say something– In science: Factual, objective claim to support

Topic sentence• Gives the topic (main idea)– In science: Factual, objective claim to support» Did you know that tardigrades are the first animal survive
in space?
» I love monarch butterflies because they are beautiful andinspiring.

» Plastic garbage in the ocean concentrates in five large areas
called gyres.

Topic sentence• Gives the topic (main idea)– In science: Factual, objective claim to support» Plastic garbage in the ocean concentrates in five large areas
called gyres.

Supporting sentences• Sentences that support the topic– Reasons, examples, details…
– In science: objective facts
Plastic garbage in the ocean concentrates in five large areas
called gyres. There are two areas of concentrated debris in thePacific ocean, two in the Atlantic, and one in the IndianOcean (Bowring et al. 2014).

Plus: Credit given to the sourceSupporting sentences• Sentences that support the topic– Reasons, examples, details…
– In science: objective facts
Plastic garbage in the ocean concentrates in five large areas
called gyres. There are two areas of concentrated debris in thePacific ocean, two in the Atlantic, and one in the Indian Ocean(Bowring et al. 2014). “Gyre” means movement in a circle.
These areas of garbage are caused by the ocean’s movement.

ReasonDefinition

Concluding sentence• Signals the end– Restates the topic OR summarizes the support
Plastic garbage in the ocean concentrates in five large areas
called gyres. There are two areas of concentrated debris in thePacific ocean, two in the Atlantic, and one in the Indian Ocean(Bowring et al. 2014). “Gyre” means movement in a circle.
These areas of garbage are caused by the ocean’s movement.
Much of the plastic litter on the earth is concentrated in thesefive major gyres.

Unity• A paragraph has one topic.
• Every sentence relates to the topic.
• If a sentence does not support the topic, takeit out.

Coherence• All sentences fit together.
– Logical order– Repeat key words– Be consistent– Add transition words

Coherence• Logical order– By time: Earliest events first, later ones later– By importance: Most important idea first– By topic: All sentences about one topic together
The engine and the transmission are both necessary to how acar operates. The engine does… Engine parts are… An engine…
The transmission does… Transmission parts include…
Together, the engine and transmission allow the car to operate.

Coherence• Repeat key words– Pronouns (it, she, they) are ambiguous.
– Repeat words that name important ideas.
– How many times?...難しい• If reader could be confused, repeat the key word.
• If topic becomes unclear, repeat the key word.

Coherence• Be consistent– Same tense for same time
– Same pronoun for same thing/person
A scientist must know many things. When she was in the lab,
she used many techniques. Then when they write about what
they discover, she often writes in English.

Coherence• Be consistent– Same tense for same time
– Same pronoun for same thing/person
A scientist must know many things. When she was in the lab,
she used many techniques. Then when they write about what
they discover, she often writes in English.
She & they both mean “a scientist”.

Coherence• Be consistent– Same tense for same time
– Same pronoun for same thing/person
A scientist must know many things. When she was in the lab,
she used many techniques. Then when they write about what
they discover, she often writes in English.

Present tense:
knowdiscoverwrites

Same time ordifferent time?
わかりにくい！

Past tense:
wasusedCoherence• Add transition words– First, next, later (time or order)– For example, For instance (examples)– Similarly, likewise, furthermore (same idea)– On the contrary, otherwise (opposite idea)– For that reason, because (cause & effect)– In conclusion, To summarize (conclusion)Paragraphs and essays• Paragraph: basic unit of academic writing– Essays are made of paragraphs.
• but also

– Essay are like paragraphs (with a few extras).

Paragraphs and essays
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Topic sentence
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Concluding sentence Unity Coherence

Essay• (Introduction paragraph)– Thesis statement••••

Supporting paragraphSupporting paragraphSupporting paragraph
Concluding paragraph Unity CoherenceEssay• Introduction paragraph– Starts general, moves toward the focus– Ends with the thesis statement• Supporting paragraphs– Support the thesis– Are paragraphs• Concluding paragraph– Summarizes points about the thesis– Chance for a “last comment”, loosely related

Multi-paragraph essay• Introduction paragraph• Starts general: Get reader’s attention• Move toward the focus• Ends with the thesis statement• Thesis statement: Main idea of all theparagraphs• “Topic sentence” for the whole essay

Multi-paragraph essay• Supporting paragraphs• Support the thesis• Are paragraphs• Each has a topic sentence• Each has unity, coherence• Usually don’t have a conclusion

Multi-paragraph essay• Concluding paragraph• Summarizes points about the thesis• Say thesis again in different words
OR• Summarize topic of each supporting paragraph• Chance for a “last comment”, loosely related

Essays and paragraphsParagraph•••••

Topic sentence
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Supporting sentence
Concluding sentence Unity Coherence

Essay• (Introduction paragraph)– Thesis statement••••

Supporting paragraphSupporting paragraphSupporting paragraph
Concluding paragraph Unity CoherencePaper 1• Choose one class topic.
– Impact craters— Pacific garbage patch– Extremophiles— Mendelian genetics– Butterfly migration• Write a lab report or an essay.
– One or two pages– Maximum 5 points for English• topic sentence, unity, coherence, etc.

– Maximum 5 points for science• clear purpose & conclusion, enough evidence, etc.