@ネット投句選評（2012 年 8 月号）
Net Haiku Selected by Hasegawa Kai < http://gokoo.main.jp>
translated by Kim and Pat
August, 2012
のうぜんのどこにも影のなかりけり

徳武信子

nôzen no doko ni mo kage no nakarikeri

Tokutake, Nobuko

season word: nôzen / trumpet vine
no shadows
anywhere ——trumpet vine
もちろん影はあるのだが、印象としてそうなのだ。超絶描写の句。
Comment: Of course the flowers cast a shadow, but they appear not to.

Thishaiku transcends description.
description.

八月や灼け尽くされて空の底

岩井善子

hachigatsu ya yaketsukusarete sora no soko

Iwai, Yoshikoseason word: hachigatsu / AugustAugust ——burnt to nothing
beneath the sky
この人の句は以前は型通りの句だったが、最近とくによい。視線の深まりというべきか。
Comment: Her haiku had been rather conventional, but recently they havebeen quite good. I would say that her viewpoint has deepened.

夏草や帰還叶はぬ町いくつ

内田朋子

natsukusa ya kikan kanawanu machi ikutsu

Uchida, Tomoko

season word: natsukusa / summer grasssummer grass ——to how many hometowns
can people not return

竹夫人昼間は猫に遊ばるる

北側松太

chikufujin hiruma wa neko ni asobaruru

Kitagawa, Matsuta

season word: chikufujin / rattan pillow
rattan pillow ——played with by a cat
in the daytime

涼風もアジアの風のひとつにて村松二本ryôfû mo ajia no kaze no hitotsu nite

Muramatsu, Nihon

season word: ryôfû / cool breeze
this cool breeze
is also a type of windfound in Asia
たしかにアジアのモンスーン地帯の風。
Comment: Yes, it is a wind that blows in the monsoon climate.

朝顔や生きて埃の立つばかり

古味嵯楓

asagao ya ikite hokori no tatsu bakari

Komi, Safûseason word: asagao / morning glory

morning glories ——being alive
only to raise dust
「生きて埃の立つばかり」とは自分を含めた人間界のようす。
“Being alive only to raise dust” describes this world of humans.

ライオンも虎もどたつと昼寝かな

才上宏子

raion mo tora mo dotatto hirune kana

Saijô, Hiroko

season word: hirune / midday nap
midday nap ——both lions and tigers
where they dropped
体当たりの一句。
Comment: This is a body-blow haiku.

草刈るや俳諧の道一歩づつ

西川遊歩

kusakaru ya haikai no michi ippo zutsu

Nishikawa,Yûho

season word: kusakaru / to mow the grass
mowing the grass ——the road to haikai
step by step
上五は「夏草や」など体言でないと。理由はお考えください。
Comment: The first five syllables must be a noun such as ”natsukusa ya”(summer grass ——) instead of “kusakaru ya” (mowing the grass ——). You
should think about why.

肩書きのなき肩軽し秋の空

三木紀幸

katagaki no naki kata karoshi aki no sora

Miki, Kikô

season word: aki no sora / autumn sky
with no titles
shoulders are light ——autumn sky

燃え上がる流燈ひとつふたつみつ京都

moeagaru ryûtô hitotsu futatsu mitsu

長井亜紀

Nagai, Aki

season word: ryûtô / votive lantern set adrift on waterburning brightlanterns on the water
one, two, three

酷暑劫暑眉間の皺で受けて立つ

橋本小たかkokusho gôsho miken no shiwa de ukete tatsu

Hashimoto, Kotaka

season word: kokusho gô sho / intense, fierce heat
intense heat fierce heat
I stand here taking it inbetween the eyes

京暑し大阪暑しといひきそふ

澤田美那子

Kyô atsushi ôsaka atsushi to iikisou
Vying with each other
Kyoto is hotter

Sawada, Minako

Osaka is hotter

茄子の馬尻をもたげて踏ん張れり広岡育子

nasu no uma shiri o motagete funbareri

Hiraoka, Ikuko

season word: nasu no uma / a horse made of an eggplant
as a Bon decoration
raising its rear end
the eggplant horsestands firm

アオザイの腕いつぱいに蓮売り

篠原隆子

aozai no ude ippai ni hachisu uri Shinohara, Takako
season word: hachisu / lotus
arms fullthe seller of lotusesin an ao dai dress

蓮は蓮の花だろう。ならば「蓮の花」とすると印象鮮明。
「売り」は捨てざるをえません。
Comment: “Hachisu” will be lotus flowers.

Instead “hachisu”, “hasu nohana” will give a sharper impression. Then you have to omit “uri” (seller)
because of the number of syllables.