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Tips for Writing Sensible Paragraphs
Unit 9Notes on Essay Construction

キーワード（key words）
つなぎ表現（transitional signals） パラグラフの分析（anatomy of paragraphs）

How to Make Yourself UnderstoodTips for Writing Sensible Paragraphs
Unit 9Notes on Essay Construction- CONTENTS -Scripts and Annotations（スクリプトと解説）
Analyzing the First Paragraphp. 97

Paragraph without a Topic Sentencep. 98

Anatomy of the Body Paragraphs

p. 99

Concluding Paragraph: How to Finish your Essay

p. 101

Cohesive Devices: Transition Signals

p. 101

Summaryp. 105Further Tips
(1) 適切な transition signals を選ぼう

p. 105Better Choice(2) 似て非なる first と at firstp. 106

At first is no kin to first!

Takashi Tsuchinaga, Satoshi Oku, and Jeff Gayman
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Scripts and Annotations (スクリプトと解説)(… so expensive. Yeah, well, that’s a good point…Ah)
Hello everyone. I’m Chuck Brown. Welcome to the "How to Make Yourself Understood" video series, Unit 9.
In the previous video, we learned the basics of essay structure.
In this video, we are going to add some notes on ways an essay can be composed, using the sample essay
presented in Unit 8. Let’s first look at the following sentence.

Analyzing the First Paragraph
When I was admitted to college last year, I started something new:the digitization of most of my reading activities.
Remember? This is a part of the thesis statement of the essay. Although the default position of a topic
sentence is the first sentence of a paragraph as we learned in Unit 7, sometimes it may not be a good idea to
put your readers suddenly in the middle of a topic which may be quite new to them. In such a case, you canprovide some preparatory statements which gradually ease the reader into the topic.
< Paragraph 1 >[1] These days, in many aspects of our daily life, computers, especially small mobile devices, arechanging the traditional way of doing things. [2] For example, mobile devices with a camera installed
have almost replaced film cameras at least for casual use. [3] Travelers now depend on maps
displayed on their mobile phone screen instead of paper maps. [4] Using an online calendar forscheduling is now quite a normal procedure. [5] As for me, when I was admitted to college last year,
I started something new to follow this trend: the digitization of most of my reading activities. [6] Let
me show you how I read books now and how I evaluate this new method of reading.
The sample paragraph starts with a very general mention of the fact that small mobile devices are changing
the traditional way of doing things. Sentences [2] to [4] list three examples of this change. Only after thesegeneral introductory statements does the topic sentence [5] appear. This sentence is also the thesis statementof the whole essay. “When I was admitted to college last year, I started something new to follow this trend:
the digitization of most of my reading activities.” The last sentence [6] follows the thesis statement toannounce the supporting ideas to be discussed below: how the author reads books now, and how the author
evaluates this method of reading. This announcement gives a brief preview of the essay’s logical progression
to the reader. In this way, when you read an essay, you should pay special attention to the first paragraph.
The thesis statement may be somewhere toward the end of the paragraph and followed by a preview of how
the thesis will be supported in the body of the essay.
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Points―――――――――――――――➡ エッセイ冒頭のパラグラフに関する注意事項
1. Unit 7 で、topic sentence の定位置はパラグラフの冒頭であると述べました。しかし、これには例外があります。そしてこの例外が最も高頻度で発生するのが、エッセイの冒頭部分なのです。なぜならエッセイの冒頭には、先行する文章が何もないからです。何も前置きがない状況でいきなり “the digitization of most of myreading activities”と書かれても、読者はとまどうかもしれません。そこで、読者を議論の中に引き込むために、一般的な話題から始めて、次第に話題を狭めていき、最終的に topic（エッセイですから同時に thesis でもある）へと導く、という手口がよく用いられます。
本格的な学術論文では、執筆者の論点を読者に理解させるために、その研究分野において、これまでにどのような研究が行われ、何がわかってきて、何がまだわかっていないかということ等を、過去の研究論文から引用しながら説明し、その後に、自分の問題意識と論点を提示するという手順を踏むことがよくあります。そのようにして自分がこれから展開しようとする議論を、これまでの研究の流れの中に位置づけるわけです。このような論述を行う場合は、エッセイ冒頭の１パラグラフだけでは足りず、数パラグラフを費やして、その終わりの方に thesis statement を置くという introduction 構成が取られることがあります。
sample essay ではそこまで壮大な構成は取っていませんが、前置きをしてから topic sentence（兼 thesis
statement）を置くという方法を採っています。落語に、「枕」という導入部分がありますね。それと似ています。
2. エッセイ冒頭のパラグラフの最後の文は、エッセイ全体の議論の進め方を予告する役割を担っています。これもエッセイ冒頭パラグラフではよく用いられる手法です。これによって、読者は自分がこの先どのような流れの議論を読むことになるのか、見当をつけることができます。読みやすく、誤読されにくい論文を書くには、
読者に手の内を明かしておいて、見通しのよい論理展開をしていくことが重要です。それも冒頭パラグラフ（introduction）の重要な役割なのです。何についてどのように論じるのかを早めに読者に伝えず、読者を宙
ぶらりんの状態にしたまま論文の末尾まで引きずり回すような書き方をしていては、おしまいまで読んでもらえません。
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Paragraph without a Topic Sentence

Next, let’s proceed to the second paragraph: the beginning of the body of this essay. Which sentence is the
topic sentence here?
< Paragraph 2: No topic sentence >[7] In order to convert the books I buy into a digital format, first I use a desktop paper cutter to cut
off the spines and separate all the sheets from each other. [8] Then I scan dozens of the sheets at atime, using a very fast document scanner. [9] The scanned data are automatically stored as PDF
files in my tablet PC. [10] The tablet PC containing these PDF files serves as a kind of book for me:
I can read and turn pages on the screen with my forefinger.
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Well, you may notice that there is no topic sentence in this second paragraph! Why is this so? This paragraphexplains the process of converting paper books to digital data. Therefore, no sentence is more important thanany other. In principle, a paragraph should contain a topic sentence, but there are some exceptions to thisrule. Just as in this second paragraph, with a recipe or instruction, each step is equally important: therefore,in essays of this kind, paragraphs may lack a topic sentence. Another possible exception is, for example, when
the paragraph is a continuation of the previous paragraph’s content.

A paragraph may lack the topic sentence if the essay is:
1. a recipe or instruction
2. a continuation of the previous paragraph’s content

Note, however, that except for these very limited cases, you must write a topic sentence for every paragraph.
OK?

Points―――――――――――――――➡ topic sentence のないパラグラフ
パラグラフには（多くの場合その冒頭に）topic sentence が置かれるというルールをすでに説明しましたが、これにも例外があります。それを示すため、あえて sample essay に topic sentence のないパラグラフを 1 つ入
れておきました。例外が起きる事例として、
1. レシピや作業手順
2. 直前のパラグラフの内容の続きがあります。このほかに、時系列にしたがって出来事（物語）を述べるという場合も topic sentence なしとなる
ことがよくあります。
しかし、みなさんがパラグラフを書くときに「自分はこのパラグラフで何を述べるのか」を明確に意識して、それを topic sentence という形でパラグラフ冒頭に書くという癖をつける必要があるので、例外は例外であり、非常に少ないのだとお考えください。sample essay でも第３パラグラフ以降は例外なく topic sentence が、しかも冒頭に置かれています。
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Anatomy of the Body Paragraphs
Now, let’s go on to paragraph 3.
< Paragraph 3 >[11] One year after having changed my reading method in this way, I have become sure that digitizedreading has several advantages. [12] First of all, I no longer have to carry along bulky textbooks
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tablet. [13] Not only the textbooks but also my whole library is now accessible wherever I go.
[14] For example, when a passage displayed on the screen happens to remind me of another related
title, I can immediately search for and open it. [15] That was impossible when I was totallydependent on paper books, because there was a limit to the number of books I could carry with me.
Sentence [11] is the topic sentence, announcing that the author is going to explain several advantages ofdigitized reading. “One year after having changed my reading method in this way, I have become sure that
digitized reading has several advantages.”
The next sentence [12] is also an important sentence in the paragraph because it starts introducing the firstadvantage: “First of all, I no longer have to carry along bulky textbooks from home to college, because
everything I need in the classroom is stored in my light-weight, handy tablet.”The second advantage is covered by paragraph 4,< Paragraph 4 >[16] In addition to this excellent portability, digital reading gives me more freedom in taking notes.
[17] Everybody knows you can jot down your memos in a paper book, if it is your own, of course.
[18] With digital reading, you can likewise annotate on the screen using your finger or a stylus pen.
[19] What is more, you can delete or modify your notes at your will, which is impossible with paper
books.
and the third advantage of digitized reading is covered by paragraph 5.
< Paragraph 5 >[20] Although someone might mention the danger of losing your whole library by losing your tablet
PC, actually, here again digitized books beat their paper-based equivalents. [21] Because digital files
are so easy to copy, I have the backups of my whole library in my laptop PC and in two portablehard-disk drives so that if my tablet is lost or broken, I still have my library data at hand. [22] This
three-fold backup is impracticable with paper books. [23] Just imagine how time-consuming andtedious it might be to make just one Xerox copy of a 200 page paper book! [24] Even if you manage
to make it, where do you put those paper copies? [25] In contrast, with digital book data, backup canbe so simply and quickly done. [26] Therefore, you can say that my books are far more securely
protected than paper books.
The structure of the body part in this essay is pretty straightforward.

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Concluding Paragraph: How to Finish your Essay

Finally, after these supporting paragraphs, the essay is concluded by paragraph 6.
< Paragraph 6 >[27] Portability, flexibility in annotation, and ease of backup: these are some of the reasons why I
am very much satisfied with my present reading environment. [28] It may be that my reading
method works because I am a sophomore and have less than a hundred books of my own. [29] A
professor who owns thousands of books would find the idea of converting them into PDF from scratch
totally unrealistic. [30] I am wondering what will happen as my library gradually increases in the
future. [31] For the time being, however, I cannot imagine my daily life without my whole library in
my tablet.
Notice that all of these paragraphs have a topic sentence at their very beginning, which makes the point ofeach very clear to the reader.
OK? From this, we can see that it is clear that the location of the topic sentence is very important. Next let's
focus on some of the cohesive devices employed and see how they glue the whole essay together.

Cohesive Devices: Transition Signals

First of all, in English writing, some words and phrases are designated “transition signals” or “transition
words”. These are some of the typical transition signals employed in this sample essay.
< paragraph 1 > For example< paragraph 2 > first, Then
< paragraph 3 > First of all, because, For example< paragraph 4 > In addition to, likewise, What is more< paragraph 5 > again, Because, In contrast, Therefore< paragraph 6 > however
Their main function is to make clear how parts of the text are connected and to help the reader follow thethread of the argument.
In paragraph 1, the phrase For example signifies that what follows are examples of small mobile devices
mentioned in the first sentence.
In paragraph 2, the words first and then clearly indicate the sequential order of the process of convertingbooks into a digital format. These transition words are very straightforward, aren’t they? They clarify thetransition within a paragraph.
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Points―――――――――――――――➡ transition signals（つなぎ語、つなぎ表現）について連続する文と文、パラグラフとパラグラフがどのような論理的なつながりを持っているかを表す接続表現を
transition signals と呼びます。これらは例えば、「例示」（for example など）、「因果関係」（because, therefore
など）
、
「逆接」
（however, although など）、「列挙」（first of all, then, likewise など）などのカテゴリーに分類されます。
transition signals の使用について意識的になることは、cohesion によってつながった文章を書くために重要なことです。たしかに紋切り型の transition signals を使い過ぎると、幼稚な感じを与えることもありますが、どのように論理的につながるのかが不明な文を連ねるよりははるかにましです。最初は型にはまったつなぎ方しかできなくても、上手な書き手の文章をたくさん読み、自分でも書く練習を重ねていくうちに、紋切り型ではな
いつなぎ方もできるようになっていくでしょう（その例は、この後のほうで紹介されています）。まずは型を覚えることが先決です。
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Another thing you should know about how paragraphs are connected is that they often start with a transition
from the previous paragraph, or end with a transition to the next paragraph. For example, paragraph 3 starts
with sentence [11].
[11] One year after having changed my reading method in this way, I have become sure that digitizedreading has several advantages.
In this sentence, the phrase having changed my reading method in this way refers to the overall content ofparagraph 2. Sentence [11] first sums up the previous paragraph and then starts a new topic: “several
advantages”.
Sometimes connecting devices can be more sophisticated. For example, sentence [12] starts the list ofadvantages of digitized books by using the transitional signal, First of all.
[12] First of all, I no longer have to carry along bulky textbooks from home to college, because
everything I need in the classroom is stored in my light-weight, handy tablet.
Here, the simplest procedure for starting paragraph 4 would seem to be to use the transitional signal secondly,
and for paragraph 5, another transitional signal thirdly, which would introduce the second and the third
advantages.
[ Potential Paragraph 4 ]Secondly, digital reading gives me more freedom in taking notes.
102Unit 9 Notes on Essay Construction< Actual Paragraph 4 >[16] In addition to this excellent portability, digital reading gives me more freedom in taking notes.
In actuality, however, paragraph 4 starts with the phrase, In addition to this excellent portability, which
serves in this situation as a transition from paragraph 3. Here, the phrase this excellent portability functions
to summarize the topic of the previous paragraph and, combined with in addition to, announces to the reader
that another advantage is to be presented.
Meanwhile, paragraph 5 could begin with:[ Potential Paragraph 5 ]Thirdly, digitized books beat their paper equivalents because digital files are so easy to copy that I
can have the backups of my whole library in my laptop PC and in two portable hard-disk drives ....
In actuality, however, the author cites a possible opposing view to the digital reading method explained inparagraphs 3 and 4, and then presents the third advantage as a counterargument to that possible criticism.
< Actual Paragraph 5 >[20] Although someone might mention the danger of losing your whole library by losing your tablet
PC, actually, here again digitized books beat their paper-based equivalents. …
Let us consider paragraph 6, the concluding paragraph. Notice that the author starts the paragraph byrecapitulating the three advantages, rather than just using a very simple transition signal such as inconclusion.
< Paragraph 6 >[27] Portability, flexibility in annotation, and ease of backup: these are some of the reasons why I
am very much satisfied with my present reading environment. …

Portability refers to paragraph 3, flexibility in annotation to paragraph 4, and ease of backup to paragraph
5. This is a very nice way to remind the reader of what was stated in the body of this essay.
Finally, after summarizing these three supporting paragraphs in this way, the author introduces a conclusive
statement: I am very much satisfied with my present reading environment. The author’s conclusion in thisessay is very clearly stated in this fashion. Further, the very last sentence in the conclusion paragraph is: I

cannot imagine my daily life without my whole library in my tablet. This leaves the reader a strong
impression of how the author is fascinated by the digitized library, and is therefore a very nice way ofconcluding the essay.
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OK. We have just seen how normal vocabulary is used to do more than what simple transition words can do:
it can be very helpful to the reader, in the course of reading a particular paragraph, at points in which wemight forget where we are in the logical development of the entire essay, and some kind of reminder isnecessary. In such cases, cohesive devices using normal vocabulary serve both as a text-glue and as areminder to help the reader keep track of the flow of the essay's argument.

Points―――――――――――――――➡ transition signals 以外の手段
たとえば第 3 パラグラフの冒頭の文[11]は、副詞句の中の having changed my reading method in this way が
第 2 パラグラフの内容を簡潔にまとめており、その後の I have become sure that digitized reading has several
advantages が第 3 パラグラフの topic を示すという働きをしています。これによって、第 2 と第 3 パラグラフのつながりができると同時に、読者はすでに読んだ第 2 パラグラフの内容を確認することができます。
[11] One year after having changed my reading method in this way, I have become sure that digitizedreading has several advantages.（このように自分の読書の仕方を変えてから 1 年たった今、私は読書のデジタル化にはいくつかの利点があると確信している。
）
第 4 パラグラフ冒頭[16]の In addition to this excellent portability も、this excellent portability によって第3 パラグラフの内容を簡潔にまとめると同時に第 4 パラグラフにつなぐという役割を持っています。Secondly という型どおりの transition signal を用いる場合と比較すると、単調さを回避するだけでなく、読者に対して親切な書き方となっています。第 3 パラグラフできちんと書いた内容をわざわざ別な言葉でまとめて挙げる必要があるのかと思われるかもしれませんが、人間はどんどん忘れていく生き物です。要所要所でそこまでのまとめをしてあげることで、記憶を新たにして論理の流れを再確認することができますし、万一誤読していたときに修正のチャンスを読者に与えることにもなります。
第 6 パラグラフ冒頭の[27]も、Portability によって第 3 パラグラフを、flexibility in annotation によって第 4
パラグラフを、ease of backup によって第 5 パラグラフをまとめながら、エッセイ全体の結論を導入する役割を果たしています。これによって、読者は、もう忘れてしまっているかもしれないエッセイ全体の論理の流れを把握し直すことができます。
ここで注意していただきたいのは、transition signal 専用の表現だけでなく、それ以外の普通の語彙をうまく使うことによっても、文章をつないで cohesion をもたらすことができるということ、そして同時に、読者に論理の流れを思い出させることができるということです。面倒だと思わないで、読者を親切に導いていく技術を身につけるよう努力してください。
――――――――――――――――――――――――――――――In these units, we have learned the basics of constructing an essay; the minimum requirements for writing
an essay which communicates your meaning clearly. From this starting point, you can learn to be a better
writer by acquiring advanced strategies like the ones we learned today, such as manipulating normal
vocabulary instead of simple transition words, or writing your conclusions by using impressive statements.
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That may seem to be a distant goal. However, you are going to have plenty of opportunities to read manyother well-written essays. If you keep paying attention to their organizing strategies, hopefully you will beable to acquire a wide and flexible repertoire of tactics to improve your writing skills.

SummaryNow, let’s wrap up today’s points.
1. In the first paragraph of an essay,(1) the topic sentence often appears after introductory statements, and(2) a brief preview of the supporting ideas can follow this delayed thesis statement.
2. The following kinds of paragraphs often have no topic sentence:(1) recipes or instructions, or(2) paragraphs which are a continuation of the previous paragraph's content.
3. You can use transition signals or other vocabulary to connect the sentences or paragraphs in an
essay with one another.
Well, that’s all for today. I hope you enjoyed the lecture. Good luck, keep working hard, and see you next time!

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Further Tips (1)
適切な transition signals を選ぼう
transition signals を使えば文と文のつながりが明確になるのですが、どんな transition signals を選んでもよ
いというわけではなく、適切なものを考えながら選ぶということが大事です。たとえば、第 4 パラグラフを以下のように書き換えてみましたが、どう思いますか？
[16] And digital reading gives me more freedom in taking notes. [17] Everybody knows you can jot
down your memos in a paper book, if it is your own, of course. [18] And with digital reading, you canannotate on the screen using your finger or a stylus pen. [19] And you can delete or modify yournotes at your will, which is impossible with paper books.
And という transition signal が多用されていますね。実は and は追加、前後関係、因果関係など、さまざまな
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つながりを表すことができる万能的表現なので、このように and だけを多用して文をつないでいくと、論理的な関係がかえって不明瞭になる危険があります。それよりは、その箇所で最も適切な、単機能の transition
signal を選ぶほうが望ましいのです。たとえば[16]の And は、digital reading の利点を追加する表現を導くので、In addition の方が適切です。[18]の And は惰性的にいいかげんに使われている例です。ここは、「紙の読書と同様に digital reading でも」というつながりを表すべきところなので、And は使わず、代わりに likewiseを使って With digital reading, you can likewise annotate....としたほうがよいでしょう。[19]は、digital
reading では「さらに」こんなこともできる、というつながりを表すので、And の代わりに What is more やMoreover を使うほうが意味がはっきりします。
このように transition signals を上手に使い分けるには、慣れと経験が必要ですので、他の人たちが書いた上
手なエッセイをたくさん読んで手本として、勘所をつかんでください。

Further Tips (2)注意！似て非なる first と at first
Transition signal の用法で、北大生に非常に多くみられる誤りを１つ紹介しましょう。それは、at first の誤用です。何となくぼんやりと意味を知っている気になっていると大きな失敗をします。列挙を示す場合、最初に、
first あるいは first of all などを使います。これらは、いくつか順番に出てくるもの最初のものを示す合図としてとても有用です。しかし、at first はこれとは全く意味が違います。列挙をする最初のものをただ順番に示すだけの場合に at first を用いると大変不自然になります。at first の意味機能を 2 つの辞書で確認してみましょう。
COBUILD7 の説明：You use at first when you are talking about what happens in the early stagesof an event or experience, …, in contrast to what happens later.
『ジーニアス英和辞典』の説明：最初は、初めは《「しかし後にはそうではなかった」の意を含み、but 節、then, later, afterward などが続くのが普通》
したがって、友達の良さを列挙して紹介しようとして、First of all, she was very nice, ….
とすれば、その人の良い点の例が次つぎに挙がってくることが自然と予測されますが、もしこれをAt first, she was very nice, …
としてしまうと、「最初は一見とてもいい人だったんだけど、実は後からそうでもないということが分かった」という意味を示唆することになってしまいます。大きく印象が変わってしまう、あるいは思わぬ誤解を与えてしまう可能性もあるので、十分に注意しましょう。このような at first の意味はどの辞書にも必ず書いてあります。
丁寧に確かめる癖をつけておくとよいでしょう。
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