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Second tranche of comments
Managing career
""The Browns released him"" - since it's the first mention in the section, change ""him"" to 
""He managed to recover from his injury"" - changed to 
""a couple of seasons"" - how many is a couple? Be specific.
""for the Bridgeport, Connecticut club for the Eastern League"" -  would be more concise
""June 27, 1918"" - comma after year
""players in the Bronx"" - de-link, used barely half a screen earlier
""and move back to baseball as a career"" -  would be more formal, and ""as a career"" isn't really necessary. The comma before this could be removed since the sentence is getting shorter.
""New York University baseball team"" - link should be expanded to cover the words ""baseball team"" because otherwise it just looks like a link to the school
""He then signed for Ed Barrow to become a coach"" - unclear, who signed where? Did Krichell become a coach or did Barrow? Regardless, ""then"" should be removed as it's superfluous.

Scouting career
""On the request of Barrow, now the new general manager of the New York Yankees, Krichell became a full-time scout"" - wait... what? I thought Barrow was with the Red Sox? What happened? Where did the change come from? No timeframe?
""The Yankees at the time had a two-man scouting rotation"" - move ""At the time"" to the beginning of the sentence
""The first player he signed"" - ""he"" is ambiguous here, as you refer to two men in the prior sentence
""was Hinkey Haines"" - comma after ""Haines""
""He then signed catcher Benny Bengough from Buffalo of the International League. and Charlie Caldwell a Princeton University graduate.""
remove ""then""
change period after IL to comma
add comma after ""Caldwell""
""A pitcher who only appeared in three games in his career"" - his whole pro career or his major league career?
""Caldwell was being used""
""That lead the way for Lou Gehrig"" - ""lead"" should be 
Found another inline season link (1912 St. Louis Browns season and 1923 Yankees season).
""to be in attendance for a""
""He happened to be in the same train with"" - ""happened to be"" is pretty informal, but I don't know specifically what to suggest. Should be re-worded.
""Gehrig hit two home runs in three at-bats"" - should be clarified that it refers to that game or that day
""After the game Krichell spoke with Ed Barrow""
comma after ""game""
Barrow linked again? Remove first name and link.
""Skeptical, Barrow send Krichell"" - 
""next game against New York University"" - NYU is linked above (though to the team, the school link itself doesn't provide a lot of context).
""After the game Gehrig"" - comma after game
""where he sometimes started at Columbia,"" - it was already mentioned above that he pitched at Columbia, so this is superfluous.
""On June 11, 1923"" - comma after year
""He did batting practice with the Yankees, while informing manager Miller Huggins about the player."" - this doesn't make a lot of sense. Who did batting practice? Who informed what? I'm confused...
""He stayed with the Yankees for two months, getting several chances to play as a pinch hitter."" - who stayed? I'm getting the impression that it's Gehrig, and we don't need all this detail about him in an article about Krichell. The focus is straying.
""On August 1, Huggins decided to send Gehrig to the Hartford Senators, where the team instructed the manager of the club to play him every day at first base, regardless of circumstances.[24]  After a hot start in Hartford, Gehrig went though a long slump and depression, leading him to consider quitting baseball."" - more about Gehrig; there's some important stuff here but it needs to be reduced to just enough to provide context for Krichell's trip.
""Krichell was emergency deployed"" - something's not right with that wording, because ""emergency"" is not an adjective. I don't know if ""deployed"" is the right word either, as he's not a military unit. Maybe ""dispatched""?  
""During a steak dinner, he found out that Gehrig was drinking. He told Gehrig that even the best players slump from time to time. He even gave batting advice to Gehrig, giving him one of Ty Cobb's old batting tricks."" - informal language. Again, I'm at a loss for what to suggest here.

Second group complete; I hope to get another section done before the end of the night tonight.  (Talk • [[WP:PHILLIES|Phi