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 Recent revert 

I think some of this article is too ""flowery"" and should just stick to the facts.  I have an issue with the following 

""Should her appeal fail, her remaining hopes lie only with the British people and government, a nation in which many people oppose capital punishment.  If she is unsuccessful in canvassing support and overturning her conviction or being granted clemency, she faces execution by lethal injection.""

I feel this should be simplified to:

""If her appeal fails or if she is not granted clemency, she faces execution by lethal injection.""

The details are as follows:

1. ""...her remaining hopes lie only with the British people and government..."" - this overemphasizes the importance of Britich public opinion of the US judicial system.  It would be more appropriate to say here hopes rest on the Govenor of Texas or whoever it is who has the authority to grant clemancy as they are the people with the autority to free her

2. ""...a nation in which many people oppose capital punishment..."" - POV and should be removed.  The statement could just as easily state that many people in the UK support capital punishment.  Here is a mori poll that claims that 70% support capital punishment http://www.beecareful.info/news/general/74447-channe-4-poll-reveals-70-per-cent-support-for-the-death-penalty.html.

3. ""...If she is unsuccessful in canvassing support and overturning her conviction or being granted clemency, she faces execution by lethal injection..."" - stating the obvious - i.e. she is on death row so obviously if nothing changes, she will be executed.  Should be changed to indicate this

I previously made these changes but they were reverted without any reason being given so any comments would be welcome. 198.240.128.75  "