Title: Identification of Causes and Consequences of Kolberi among Iranian Kurdish Women:
A Grounded Theory Study
Version: 2 Date: 06 Apr 2023
Reviewer's report:
Thank you for giving me the opportunity to read this manuscript. I much appreciate the topic,
which is Women’s Kolbari in Iranian Kurdistan. Unfortunately there is no specific study on
women Kolbari, and I believe this study will contribute in our knowledge in field of  women
studies.
General:
1- The language of paper is seriously suffering from grammatical and conceptual mistakes. It
is recommended to revise and sometimes re-write the text. One who knows both English and
Parsi, can easily understand the mistakes of text. With out deep revision, I believe the paper is
not publishable.
Introduction:
1- Please notice that if you use Iranian Kurdistan or Kurdish region of Iran, also mention to
Regional Government of Kurdistan in Iraq, or Iraqi Kurdistan. It is a political geographic issue
that Iranian Kurdistan is co-boarder with Iraqi Kurdistan. These two parts of Kurdistan definitely
have common culture and identity, and it makes Kolbari easier for them. Please mention this
issue.
2- The question of paper is not clear. What has been mentioned is the “aim” of the study. Also
consider that your research question must be associate with “Grounded Theory” logic, otherwise
it is merely a “Content Analysis”. So be precise about the question(s) of the study. It is not a
grounded theory question just to say “identifying the causes and consequences of Kolberi among
women in the Kurdish regions”, because identifying causes and consequences are essential parts
of grounded theory approach, so can not be used to formulate the questions.
Results:
1. Compress the tables. They are very long and takes much space of the paper.
2- The quotations are presented very mechanical, while they must be presented with enough
descriptions. It is necessary to provide reader with quotations which illustrate the different
dimensions and properties of that category, not just putting some quotations and leave them.
Every description of categories and sub-categories must be ended by short description, possibly
link that category with the next one.
3-Concepts and categories are extracted and abstracted well. They are clear, although there
might be some translational mistakes. But what is absent in the process of data analysis and
presenting them is the “Core Category”. Grounded Theory without “Core Category” is nothing
but a conventional content analysis. “Core Category” unify all your findings and tell us the
core of your claimed “grounded theory”. In this study due to lake of Core Category, we don’t
understand the Kolbari well. We don’t know “What is” the women Colbari, or in another word
“Kolbari as what?”. So, strongly recommend to extract “Core Category”. It must be an abstract
concept(s) which cover, like an umbrella, all the meaning of the previous sub-categories. So
make rich your study with “Core Category”.
Discussin:
1- Discussion section is almost the replication of result section in a shorter way. Please read one
more time the APA guideline how to write the discussion section of the paper. It will be helpful
and of course improves this section.
2- We know that in grounded theory we do not follow a specific theory, but at the end of
study, specially when we present the “Core Category”, we must link our findings with existing
theory and present more strongly our own Grounded Theory. Here, not only we have no “Core
Category” which shows your formulated “Grounded Theory”, but also there is no signs of
theoretical explanation of your results.
Conclusion:
1- Re-write the conclusion section. It is partly the replication of result and discussion sections.
Resources:
1- I refer the authors to another study on Kolbari. It is a Ph.D. dissertation in sociology in Tabriz
University, Iran.
Golami, Ahmad. Grounding Contexts and Consequences of “Kolbari Life” The Case of
Piranshahr.
Which is written in Farsi with title:
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