Reviewer’s report
Title: 
Relationship between Loci of Control and Health-Promoting Behaviors in
Pakistani Women with Polycystic Ovary Syndrome: Coping strategies as
mediators
Version: 
0 
Date: 
21 Mar 2021
Reviewer's report:
In this study, authors explore the relationship between 3 HLOCs, 4 Coping
strategies on HPLB related to PCOS and their interrelationships. The study is
well planned, statistical analyses are appropriate. However, the unstructured
presentation of results makes it difficult to comprehend. The discussion is
concise and simple but may include more reflections, differences of present
study from those from other regions, constructive measures that could be taken
by health administrators to improve PCOS management etc.
1. Certain grammatical errors and sentences requiring rephrasing are highlighted
in the attached annotated manuscript.
2. Page 10, Lines 17-42 can be moved to methodology.
3. Table 1- Variable numbers from 2-13, what do they indicate?
4. Page 10, Lines- 7-10. Active practical coping has significant positive co-
relations with HPLB. 
What are the negative values observed in Table 
-.57 and -.59? 
5. Some sentences appear very confusing and need to be simplified (Page 3, 45-
50; Page 10, lines 44-51).
6. It would be better to describe each table/type of analyses and its results
simultaneously rather than describing the analyses first.
7. Page 10, lines 44-51- These results are based on which table?
8. Table legends/descriptions are missing
9. Results, written in the current form are extremely difficult to comprehend.
They are not well organized. It would be better to segregate and discuss them.
Rather than combining sentences, discuss each parameter individually- Eg Page
10, Lines- 44-56, Page 11, Lines- 6-16, 39-43.
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