Title: Impact of web-based health education on HPV vaccination uptake among college girl
students in Western and Northern China: a follow-up study
Version: 1 Date: 14 Dec 2021
Reviewer's report:
I applaud the authors for conducting an interesting article. The study does have weaknesses in
method section, and the manuscript could be helped with significantly better editing. It also
requires grammatical revised.
a. Please write the type of study, sample size, sampling strategy and date and country of study
in both abstract and method section. It would be good if you could write the type of current study
(e.g. review, clinical experimental study, analytical descriptive study, double blinded clinical
study, cohort study and etc.) in the both abstract and materials & methods sections.
b. It was better if you wrote some of main finding as quantitative or mean ±SD within the
abstract. The result section in the abstract is poor and immature!!
c. The introduction section is very long. You could summarize this section a bit more for
readers. Write about the problems, the novelty of your study, and your study goals within the
introduction.
d. The novelty of your work must be discussed , it seems it is so weak
e. The materials & methods section is relatively immature. You could expand it a bit more clearly
for readers. For example, write about the sample size. How did you calculate sample size for
this survey? Where have you collected samples? Write the year and the name of place in which
you had done this survey. Furthermore, write about all applied exclusion and inclusion criteria
a bit more clearly by which you selected samples for this survey.
f. What was your sample size formula? What is your expected power? please mention in main
text
g. Explain how to calculate the validity and reliability of the questionnaire
h. Mention the possible score (range) for each scales and meaning of it so easier to readers
interpret the results
i. Which Type of randomization did you use?; (such as (1) simple, (2) block, (3) stratified and (4)
unequal randomization or some other methods such as biased coin, minimization and response-
adaptive
j. What criteria did you use for measuring variables? (Write in method section)
k. Why did not you use repeated measurement analysis. You must use it. with this method you
can test within and between effect simultaneously
l.
Did you have any missing value in your study? If it was, please write what was your strategy
for solving this problem. It is critical points for control non response bias. please mention
m. You could increase the number of more recently studies in the reference section. You should
have comprehensive and reliable comparisons between your findings with the other previous
studies. Furthermore, In the discussion section I would like to see a more profound discussion
about the findings. What is the meaning of your results in light of earlier studies. The discussion
should be more than only a repetition of the results accompanied by some arbitrary studies
n. In the discussion, you did not include related previous studies in relation to the findings of
the current study. Please search and cite related studies and include them in your discussion
o. There are some spelling and grammatical errors in the text. Please correct them