Title: The effect of educational intervention based on theory of planned behavior on behavioral
responses of premenopausal women in prevention of osteoporosis
Version: 2 Date: 24 Mar 2022
Reviewer's report:
Dear Author
Most previous comments have not been answered or applied. Please answer the questions
accurately and specifically, not in general.
Abstract:
Background:
It is necessary to mention the importance of educational intervention based on the theory of
planned behavior in the prevention of osteoporosis.
Methods:
Please use “participants” instead of “subjects” in the text of the manuscript.
Please remove the redundant word "present" from phrases such as present study, present
educational intervention, etc.
Please write the following:
-Year of study.
-Number of people in the intervention and control groups.
-Random sampling techniques (Simple, Systematic, etc.)
Please add the words "valid" and "reliable" to the questionnaire.
Sentences such as a "questionnaire were filled out …..by subject" and" Obtained data were
analyzed" are not suitable for scientific writing. Correct the sentences.
Please remove the redundant phrase "descriptive statistical tests".
Results:
The word “knowledge” must be used singularly.
Please note the mean, standard deviation, and p-value of the TPB constructs and the other
variables.
Keywords: Please write the keywords using MeSH.
Background
The sentence related to the World Health Organization is long and incomprehensible. Please
rewrite.
Please remove redundant phrases such as “According to WHO”, “most of the scientific articles”,
“Studies indicated that” and " According to this theory”
It is best to summarize the paragraphs on the importance of osteoporosis.
Please summarize the application of theory in education and explain the structures of the theory
of planned behavior.
The need to apply the theory of planned behavior in explaining behavior should be added to the
last paragraph of the background.
The study gap is not justified. What is research educational innovation? Please explain the need
for osteoporosis prevention based on theory, logically and documented. Are there no similar
studies before? If there is a study, write down the importance of the present study and its
innovation. If it does not exist, it should also be stated.
Methods
Please use academic and scientific terms to write sentences. Use “sample size calculation”
instead of “sample volume determination”.
Express the dropout rate.
Please insert numbers in the formula.
The process of random sampling and allocation should be fully described.
“Undercover" is not correct. Please use women who refer to the center.
Please rewrite the paragraph scientifically:
Sampling was performed based on the number of health documents of women under cover of
two selected health centers. Then subjects were gathered on a special day in the health center
and were introduced to each other. Also, the objectives of the study were explained to them and
a consent letter was signed by studied women.
Please insert TPB reference.
Is knowledge measured by an 8-point Likert scale? Knowledge is not measured by agreeing or
disagreeing. Please explain more.
Please summarize the sentences. Do not repeat phrases such as “2 questions about”...
Please summarize the paragraph related to the items of the theory-based questionnaire. All
structures are about calcium and vitamin D intake and physical activity, so remove extra phrases.
Mention the level of physical activity.
Please Report the range of CVI and CVR.
The content validity index is correct. Please delete the content validity ratio.
Please note the reliability of perceived behavioral control, intention, and behavior.
Explain the educational intervention in a table. Time, Construct, adjustment, content,
educational methods and materials, educator, strategy, learner assignment, and evaluation.
The control group received a booklet. So it has not been without intervention. What did the
booklet contain? Explain more.
Repeated Measures ANOVA
Results
Please, the results written in the first paragraph, be presented by the table. The text should be
summarized.
Table1: The title of Table 1 should be written academically and scientifically. The number of
participants should be mentioned. Report the statistical tests used at the table footnote.
Table 2: The title of Table 2 is too long. It is not necessary to mention all the variables in the title.
Report the statistical tests used at the table footnote.
Discussion
The Matching of the experimental and control groups does not need to be discussed.
Excess sentences such as "Present results indicated that 2 weeks and 2 months after educational
intervention" should be removed.
Please remove the phrase “Results of the current study showed that” from the whole discussion.
Avoid repeating the results in the discussion. The results should be compared and interpreted.
Conclusion
Please remove the phrase “Based on obtained results, it can be concluded that”.
Why not all TPB constructs are mentioned?
Please suggest the design, implementation, and evaluation of the intervention based on theory.
Best regards