Title: Identification of Causes and Consequences of Kolberi among Iranian Kurdish Women:
A Grounded Theory Study
Version: 2 Date: 08 Apr 2023
Reviewer's report:
Dear,
I reviewed an article entitled “Identification of causes and consequences of Kolberi among
Iranian Kurdish women”. Although the topic is novel, the article needs major revision. It also
needs English editing. My suggestions for authors are as follows;
Title
It should be written based on the principles of capitalization.
Abstract
There is no need to write “using a grounded theory approach” in the background section. You
should also write the name of applied software for analysis and the significance level of the tests.
You must use either present or past tense, not both.
It is incorrect to write: “Data were analyzed by using…”. Omit “by”.
You declared “Data were analyzed by using the Strauss and Corbin method”. It is incomplete.
You should write the name of method.
You should declare the time duration of the study.
Use financial support instead of material.
Introduction
Do not write reference number in the middle of the sentence. Place number 4 beside reference 10.
… Kurdish Kolbers are estimated to range from 70.000 [4] to 200.000 [10].
Methods
Omit “the” before understanding
In the sentence “having at least an experience of one-time Kolberi in the recent month”, omit
“at least” and “one-time”
Write ground theory with small letter.
You should point at the duration of data gathering.
The following sentence is vague;
For the participants to more comfortably provide the researcher with their experiences,...
A degree of MA is incorrect. Replace it with MA degree.
You mentioned that each interview lasted for an average of 30-90 minutes. 30 to 90 is not an
average. You should report a number as an average or write between 30 to 90 minutes.
Correct the following sentence; All questionnaire questions were all asked from the participants.
In a qualitative-studies with grounded theory approach, we start with few prepared questions,
but probing questions followed in line with the process of theoretical sampling method and the
interview. How you provide 12 fixed questions? In fact, you limited answers and did not allow
them to express their experience.
You should mention Strauss and Corbin’s approach. What was their approach?
How many researchers compare extracted codes and categories?
In the end of each interview….??? Is it correct?
recording ff ?? please edit the entire article.
Results
Please draw tables without any vertical lines.
In table 2, please do not repeat Kg in frequency column, just write Kg at the end of “weight
of the load”.
You write “material poverty” as a sub-category of the economic factors category. I suggest you
to replace material poverty with financial poverty.
Categories of the consequences in table 3 are divided into 3 categories. I think it is better to
merge them in 2; individual and social consequences.
Discrimination could not be positive and it is vague. In fact, it is better to choose another word
because of contradiction.
Spirituality has a wide range of meaning. In my opinion, you shoud not use this word when you
only refer to God.
Is it correct to have two subcategories entitled “permanent fear and distress” and “mental
issues”??  I think “permanent fear and distress” could be merge with “mental issues”.
Overall, considering that you asked the participants 12 fixed questions, it seems that the
results have moved in a certain direction. Therefore, saturation has achieved by mistake. This
importance can be seen by reviewing the factors mentioned in the introduction and the absence
of some of them in your findings.
For each statement, please add age and level of education beside participant numbers in
parentheses.
Discussion
You wrote: “This reason for this…”. Change it please.
Use more references and refer to them throughout the paragraph when it is long. For example,
you referred to 3 references at the end of second paragraph, but in the middle of it you did not
refer to any references.
Some paragraphs such as 4, 6, 7, etc. had no reference. Please check your discussion and enrich
mentioned paragraphs with relevant references.
….is an inappropriate job for women for to its conditions?? Please edit it.
You wrote; Spirituality was also another stagey. Please edit it.
Please correct the following sentence; “Because one of the researchers was a Kolber, he could
better understudy the problems of women Kolbers”.
What do you mean by “researchers were faced with participants to have their own participants”??