Reviewer's report
Title:Prevalence And Determinants Of Unintended Pregnancy Among Pregnant
Woman Attending ANC At Gelemso General Hospital, Oromiya Region, East
Ethiopia: A Facility Based Cross-Sectional Study
Version:6Date:10 April 2016
Reviewer: Kirsten I Black
Reviewer's report:
This paper is improved but there are still numerous syntax and other errors that
require correcting before this manuscript can be accepted. Below is a list of
essential revisions.
ABSTRACT
This study aimed to assess (not assessing)
Results wording awkward
Out of the 413 pregnancies, 112 (27.1%) were unintended, 90(21.9%) were 35
mistimed, whereas the rest 22(5.2%) were unwanted. Multivariate analysis
revealed that 36 single, divorced/widowed marital status, having more than 2
children, and having no 37 awareness of contraception were found to have
significant association with unintended 38 pregnancy.
Suggest reword to
Out of the 413 pregnancies, 112 (27.1%) were unintended of which 90 (21.9%)
were 35 mistimedvand 22(5.2%) were unwanted. Multivariate analysis revealed
that single, or divorced/widowed marital status, having more than 2 children, and
having no awareness of contraception were significantly associated with
unintended pregnancy.
Conclusion
“awareness on contraceptives” change to awareness of
to all mothers who gave birth at health institution were 43 recommended in order
to reduce the rate of the unintended pregnancy.
Change to
to all mothers giving birth at health institution to reduce the rate of the unintended
pregnancy amongst parous women
BACKGROUND
Page 3 line 47, Remove therefore .
Page 4 line 7 reword to women of reproductive age
Line 79-82 does not make sense needs rewording
METHODS
Page 5 line 91 has a catchment
Page 5 line 96-96 change words in brackets to an estimate only as no previous
data were available
Page 5 line 99-100 needs rewording poor English
Page 5 line 105 remove the word “Like”
Page 5 line 109 should read a supplementary file
Page 5 line 129 add the to the multivariate model
RESULTS
Page 7 typo in heading “socio-demographic’
Page 7 lines 145-148 multiple syntax errors, spaces and commas in the wrong
position
Page 7 line 148 ethnicity was Oromo
Page 7 line 150 only had access to health services
Page 7 line 154 had given birth
Page 8 line 163-168 poor English expression. Entire sentence needs rewording
Page 8 line 175 Typo regarding numbers of children 3-52???
Page 8 line 178 Poor English
DISCUSSION
Page 9 IN the discussion you talk about other Ethiopian studies yet in the
methods you say that there was no previous data. Would it not be better to say in
the methods that your sample size prevalence calculation was based on other
studies in ethiopia?
Page 9 line 188 a Kenyan study
Page 9 line 191 since that time
Page 9 line 196 respondent for unintended pregnancy
Page 10 line 205-207 poor worded and syntax errors
Page 10 line 211 does not make sense the comment about practice sex
CONCLUSION
Page 11 line 230 Reword first sentence to say “Over a quarter of women had an
unintended pregnancy, a rate which is lower than previously reported.”
Page 11 line 234-235 reword as previously recommended
Page 11 Final sentence needs rewording
Level of interest: An article of importance in its field
Quality of written English: Not suitable for publication unless extensively edited
Statistical review: No, the manuscript does not need to be seen by a statistician.
Declaration of competing interests:
I declare that I have no competing interests