Writing prompt: The Story of The Amazing Spider-Man

Student essay:
He was so amazing that it was hard to forget. When I was a child, I first saw America cartoons"Spider-Man". I was deeply attracted by this super hero.
Spiderman's name is Peter Parker. He lost his parents when he was very young and lived with his aunt and uncle. Peter had a normal school life. But because of a chance, his life became interesting.
On his journey with his classmates, he got bit by a spider. When he got up,he found that he didn't need glasses anymore,he can jump high,climb the walls and so on. He became very angry when he found out that his uncle was killed by the robber. He caught the robber by his ability. After then,he remembered his uncle had said,'the more power you have,the more responsibility you should take.' He did it so and became a guardian of the city.
Spider-Man's most important battle has been within himself: the struggle between the ordinary obligations of Peter Parker and the extraordinary responsibilities of Spider-Man. With the emergence of Electro, Peter must confront a foe far more powerful than he. And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returns, Peter comes to realize that all of his enemies have one thing in common.

Corrected essay:
He was so amazing that it was hard to forget. When I was a child, I first saw the American cartoon "Spider-Man". I was deeply attracted by this superhero.
Spider-Man's name is Peter Parker. He lost his parents when he was very young and lived with his aunt and uncle. Peter had a normal school life. But because of a chance, his life became interesting.
On his journey with his classmates, he got bitten by a spider. When he got up, he found that he didn't need glasses anymore, and he could jump high, climb walls, and so on. He became very angry when he found out that his uncle was killed by a robber. He caught the robber with his ability. After that, he remembered his uncle had said, "The more power you have, the more responsibility you should take." He did so and became a guardian of the city.
Spider-Man's most important battle has been within himself: the struggle between the ordinary obligations of Peter Parker and the extraordinary responsibilities of Spider-Man. With the emergence of Electro, Peter had to confront a foe far more powerful than he. And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returned, Peter came to realize that all of his enemies had one thing in common.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: When I was a child, I first saw America cartoons"Spider-Man".
correct_sentence: When I was a child, I first saw the American cartoon "Spider-Man".
error: America cartoons"Spider
correction: the American cartoon "Spider
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The necessary article 『the』 is missing here to specify the cartoon “Spider-Man”, so 『the』 is added after 〈saw〉 to conform to grammatical rules; ② PoS Confusion Error: An adjective form is needed here to modify the noun 〈cartoon〉, so 〈America〉 is changed to 『American』 to conform to grammatical rules; ③ Noun Number Error: The comic 《Spider-Man》 is a singular work, so 〈cartoons〉 is changed to 『cartoon』 to conform to grammatical rules; ④ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, words must be separated by spaces, so 〈cartoons"Spider〉 is changed to 『cartoon "Spider』 to conform to conventions.
error_sentence: I was deeply attracted by this super hero.

correct_sentence: I was deeply attracted by this superhero.

error: super hero
correction: superhero
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express “superhero” here, so 〈super hero〉 is a misspelling of 『superhero』, and 〈super hero〉 needs to be changed to 『superhero』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Spiderman's name is Peter Parker.
correct_sentence: Spider-Man's name is Peter Parker.
error: Spiderman
correction: Spider-Man
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express “Spider-Man” here, so 〈Spiderman〉 is a misspelling of 『Spider-Man』, and 〈Spiderman〉 needs to be changed to 『Spider-Man』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: On his journey with his classmates, he got bit by a spider.
correct_sentence: On his journey with his classmates, he got bitten by a spider.
error: bit
correction: bitten
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Voice Error: The passive voice is needed here to indicate being bitten by a spider, so 〈bit〉 is changed to the past participle 〈bitten〉 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: When he got up,he found that he didn't need glasses anymore,he can jump high,climb the walls and so on.
correct_sentence: When he got up, he found that he didn't need glasses anymore, and he could jump high, climb walls, and so on.
error: he can
correction: and he could
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: 〈When he got up,he found that he didn't need glasses anymore〉 and 〈he can jump high,climb the walls and so on〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, so 『and』 is added before 〈he〉 to standardize the sentence structure; ② Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, so the verb needs to be in the past tense, thus 〈can〉 is changed to 『could』 to conform to the contextual tense.
error_sentence: When he got up,he found that he didn't need glasses anymore,he can jump high,climb the walls and so on.
correct_sentence: When he got up, he found that he didn't need glasses anymore, and he could jump high, climb walls, and so on.
error: the walls
correction: walls,
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: This refers to any wall in general, not a specific wall, so 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: He became very angry when he found out that his uncle was killed by the robber.
correct_sentence: He became very angry when he found out that his uncle was killed by a robber.
error: the
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The first mention of 〈robber〉 is a general reference and needs to be modified by the indefinite article 『a』, so 〈the〉 is changed to 『a』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: He caught the robber by his ability.
correct_sentence: He caught the robber with his ability.
error: by
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The correct collocation to express “using ability” is 『with his ability』, so 〈by〉 is changed to 『with』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: After then,he remembered his uncle had said,'the more power you have,the more responsibility you should take.'
correct_sentence: After that, he remembered his uncle had said, "The more power you have, the more responsibility you should take."
error: then
correction: that
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Other Error: The correct phrase is 『after that』, where 『that』 refers to the preceding event, so 〈then〉 is changed to 『that』 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: After then,he remembered his uncle had said,'the more power you have,the more responsibility you should take.'
correct_sentence: After that, he remembered his uncle had said, "The more power you have, the more responsibility you should take."
error: said,'the
correction: said, "The
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: Direct speech requires double quotation marks 『"』, so 〈'〉 is changed to 『"』 to conform to punctuation rules; ② Case Error: The first letter of the first word 〈the〉 in the quotation needs to be capitalized, so 〈the〉 is changed to 『The』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: After then,he remembered his uncle had said,'the more power you have,the more responsibility you should take.'
correct_sentence: After that, he remembered his uncle had said, "The more power you have, the more responsibility you should take."
error: '
correction: "
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: Direct speech requires double quotation marks 『"』, so 〈'〉 is changed to 『"』 to conform to punctuation rules.
error_sentence: He did it so and became a guardian of the city.

correct_sentence: He did so and became a guardian of the city.

error: it
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The correct phrase is 『did so』, meaning “acted in this way”, so 〈it〉 is deleted to correctly express the sentence meaning.
error_sentence: With the emergence of Electro, Peter must confront a foe far more powerful than he.
correct_sentence: With the emergence of Electro, Peter had to confront a foe far more powerful than he.
error: must
correction: had to
error_sentence: And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returns, Peter comes to realize that all of his enemies have one thing in common.
correct_sentence: And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returned, Peter came to realize that all of his enemies had one thing in common.
error: returns
correction: returned
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: The context is past narration, so 〈returns〉 is changed to 『returned』 to maintain tense consistency.
error_sentence: And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returns, Peter comes to realize that all of his enemies have one thing in common.
correct_sentence: And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returned, Peter came to realize that all of his enemies had one thing in common.
error: comes
correction: came
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: The context is past narration, so 〈comes〉 is changed to 『came』 to maintain tense consistency.
error_sentence: And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returns, Peter comes to realize that all of his enemies have one thing in common.
correct_sentence: And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returned, Peter came to realize that all of his enemies had one thing in common.
error: have
correction: had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: The context is past narration, so 〈have〉 is changed to 『had』 to maintain tense consistency.