Writing prompt: My Hero

Student essay:
My name is X,and I come from China. And my hero is my dad,because he has many friends.
My dad is not special,but he had taught me a lot. If I quarrel with my good friends,
he will teach me how to get along well with my friends. Once I have a bad mark,he did not scold me,but to comfort me. He is kind and helpful,I can ask him question anytime. Every day, he silently pays attention to me,
he loves my hobby,and he always enjoys hobby with me at weekend. He helps me in my life and never strict with me. He can really understand me.

Corrected essay:
My name is X, and I come from China. And my hero is my dad, because he has many friends.
My dad is not special, but he has taught me a lot. If I quarrel with my good friends, he will teach me how to get along well with my friends. Once I had a bad mark, he did not scold me but comforted me. He is kind and helpful, and I can ask him questions anytime. Every day, he silently pays attention to me.
He loves my hobby, and he always enjoys the hobby with me at the weekend. He helps me in my life and is never strict with me. He can really understand me.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My dad is not special,but he had taught me a lot.
correct_sentence: My dad is not special, but he has taught me a lot.
error: had
correction: has
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: The tense of the main clause 〈he had taught〉 is inconsistent with the present tense of the context; the intention here is to emphasize that the father's teaching has continued to the present, so the present perfect tense should be used, thus changing 〈he had taught〉 to 『has taught』.
error_sentence: If I quarrel with my good friends,
he will teach me how to get along well with my friends.
correct_sentence: If I quarrel with my good friends, he will teach me how to get along well with my friends.
error: 

error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The conditional adverbial clause “If I quarrel...” and the main clause “he will teach...” are incorrectly separated by a newline character, causing a break in sentence structure. Delete the newline character to keep the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Once I have a bad mark,he did not scold me,but to comfort me.
correct_sentence: Once I had a bad mark, he did not scold me but comforted me.
error: have
correction: had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: The present tense of the temporal adverbial clause 〈Once I have〉 conflicts with the past tense of the main clause 〈he did not scold〉. Change 〈have〉 to 『had』 to make the tense of the subordinate clause consistent with the main clause.
error_sentence: Once I have a bad mark,he did not scold me,but to comfort me.
correct_sentence: Once I had a bad mark, he did not scold me but comforted me.
error: ,but to comfort
correction: but comforted
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, a comma is not needed before “but” in the parallel structure “did not scold..., but...”; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The infinitive 〈to comfort〉 does not fit the parallel predicate structure. It needs to be changed to 『but comforted』 to maintain the parallel structure of the predicate verbs.
error_sentence: He is kind and helpful,I can ask him question anytime.
correct_sentence: He is kind and helpful, and I can ask him questions anytime.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The two independent clauses “He is kind...” and “I can ask...” each contain a predicate structure and need to be connected by a conjunction, so 『and』 is added to conform to the rules of compound sentence structure.
error_sentence: He is kind and helpful,I can ask him question anytime.
correct_sentence: He is kind and helpful, and I can ask him questions anytime.
error: question
correction: questions
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English expression norms, in 〈ask him question〉, 〈question〉 as a countable noun needs to be in the plural form 『questions』 to indicate a general reference when not limited to a singular.
error_sentence: Every day, he silently pays attention to me,
he loves my hobby,and he always enjoys hobby with me at weekend.
correct_sentence: Every day, he silently pays attention to me.
 He loves my hobby, and he always enjoys the hobby with me at the weekend.
error: ,
he
correction: .
He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the independent clauses “Every day...” and “he loves...” need to be separated by a period, so 〈, he〉 is changed to 『. He』.
error_sentence: Every day, he silently pays attention to me,
he loves my hobby,and he always enjoys hobby with me at weekend.
correct_sentence: He loves my hobby, and he always enjoys the hobby with me at the weekend.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, in 〈enjoys hobby〉, 〈hobby〉 as a countable noun needs the definite article 『the』 to specify a particular hobby.
error_sentence: Every day, he silently pays attention to me,
he loves my hobby,and he always enjoys hobby with me at weekend.
correct_sentence: He loves my hobby, and he always enjoys the hobby with me at the weekend.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression norms, the noun 〈weekend〉 needs the determiner 『the』 before it to specify a particular time period, conforming to idiomatic English usage.
error_sentence: He helps me in my life and never strict with me.
correct_sentence: He helps me in my life and is never strict with me.
correction: is
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to English grammar rules, the parallel predicate 〈never strict〉 is missing a linking verb; 『is』 needs to be added after the subject 〈he〉 to form a complete subject-linking verb-predicative structure.