Writing prompt: My Weekend

Student essay:
Last week our English club asked students about their weekend activities.Our question was "How do you spend your weekend?"Here are the results.
We found that forty percent students always stay at home to study.It's a good way to learn well.I think all of students should be this.
Watching TV and listen to music are popular.The twenty-five percent of our students often watch TV or listen to music to relax on weekends.
We all know go online is the popular many students use the internet every day.
Twenty percent of us often talk on QQ or play the computer games.Most students use it just for fun and not for homework.But I think the best way for fun is through exercise.
For housework there are only ten percent of us help with parents.And joining the sports activities are few too only five percent.I feel very sad,I think exercise is good for the mind and body."Old habits die hard."So let's start changing it before it's too late!

Corrected essay:
Last week our English club asked students about their weekend activities. Our question was "How do you spend your weekend?" Here are the results.
We found that forty percent of students always stay at home to study. It's a good way to learn well. I think all students should do this.
Watching TV and listening to music are popular. Twenty-five percent of our students often watch TV or listen to music to relax on weekends.
We all know going online is popular. Many students use the Internet every day.
Twenty percent of us often chat on QQ or play computer games. Most students use it just for fun and not for homework. But I think the best way to have fun is through exercise.
For housework only ten percent of us help our parents. And only five percent of students join sports activities. I feel very sad. I think exercise is good for the mind and body. "Old habits die hard." So let's start changing it before it's too late!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Our question was "How do you spend your weekend?"Here are the results.

correct_sentence: Our question was "How do you spend your weekend?" Here are the results.

error: weekend?"Here
correction: weekend?" Here
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is needed after the quoted sentence 〈"How do you spend your weekend?"〉 to separate it from the following content, therefore 〈"Here〉 is changed to 『'' Here』 to conform to English writing conventions.
error_sentence: We found that forty percent students always stay at home to study.
correct_sentence: We found that forty percent of students always stay at home to study.
correction: of
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, when describing the percentage of students, the determiner 『of』 is needed to indicate a part of the whole. Therefore, 『of』 is added in the middle of 『forty percent students』 to become 『forty percent of students』.
error_sentence: I think all of students should be this.

correct_sentence: I think all students should do this.

error: of
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the 『of』 in 『all of students』 is redundant and should be removed to make the expression more concise and fluent. Therefore, 『all of students』 is changed to 『all students』.
error_sentence: I think all of students should be this.

correct_sentence: I think all students should do this.

error: be
correction: do
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: When describing a suggestion, the verb 『do』 should be used after “should” instead of 『be』, because 『do』 is more appropriate for the context. Therefore, 『should be this』 is changed to 『should do this』.
error_sentence: Watching TV and listen to music are popular.
correct_sentence: Watching TV and listening to music are popular.
error: listen
correction: listening
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, parallel subject structures need to maintain grammatical consistency; therefore, “listen to music” is changed to 『listening to music』 to match the form of 『Watching TV』.
error_sentence: The twenty-five percent of our students often watch TV or listen to music to relax on weekends.

correct_sentence: Twenty-five percent of our students often watch TV or listen to music to relax on weekends.

error: The twenty
correction: Twenty
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the percentage phrase 〈twenty-five percent〉 does not require the article 〈the〉 when used as the subject at the beginning of a sentence, therefore the redundant determiner is deleted.
error_sentence: We all know go online is the popular many students use the internet every day.

correct_sentence: We all know going online is popular.
error: go
correction: going
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb 〈know〉 is followed by an object clause, the subject of the clause 〈go online〉 needs to be in the gerund form 『going online』 to represent the act of “going online”; therefore, “go online” should be changed to 『going online』.
error_sentence: We all know go online is the popular many students use the internet every day.

correct_sentence: We all know going online is popular. Many students use the Internet every day.

error: the popular many
correction: popular. Many
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression habits, the adjective 〈popular〉 as a predicative does not require the definite article 〈the〉, so 『the』 in “the popular” should be removed to conform to English idiomatic expression; ② Sentence Structure Error: The two independent sentences “We all know going online is the popular” and “Many students use the Internet every day” each contain a predicate structure and should be separated by a period, therefore 『popular many』 is changed to 『popular. Many』.
error_sentence: We all know go online is the popular many students use the internet every day.

correct_sentence: Many students use the Internet every day.

error: internet
correction: Internet
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the proper noun 〈Internet〉 must be capitalized, therefore 〈internet〉 is changed to 『Internet』, meaning “network”.
error_sentence: Twenty percent of us often talk on QQ or play the computer games.
correct_sentence: Twenty percent of us often chat on QQ or play computer games.
error: talk
correction: chat
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English collocations, 〈talk on QQ〉 is not a common expression and needs to be changed to the more accurate verb 『chat』 to describe online chatting behavior.
error_sentence: Twenty percent of us often talk on QQ or play the computer games.
correct_sentence: Twenty percent of us often chat on QQ or play computer games.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the generic noun 〈computer games〉, meaning “computer games,” does not require the article 〈the〉 before it, therefore the redundant determiner is deleted.
error_sentence: But I think the best way for fun is through exercise.

correct_sentence: But I think the best way to have fun is through exercise.

error: for
correction: to have
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The fixed phrase 〈the best way to do something〉 requires an infinitive, therefore 〈for fun〉 is changed to 『to have fun』, expressing “the best way to do something”.
error_sentence: For housework there are only ten percent of us help with parents.
correct_sentence: For housework only ten percent of us help our parents.
error: there are
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: In the sentence, “there are” and “help” cannot appear together; the sentence remains complete after removing “there are”. Therefore, 『there are』 is deleted.
error_sentence: For housework there are only ten percent of us help with parents.
correct_sentence: For housework only ten percent of us help our parents.
error: with
correction: our
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to the English fixed expression, “to help someone” is “help sb.”, whereas in 〈help with parents〉, the preposition 〈with〉 indicating manner is inappropriate and needs to be changed to 『help our parents』 to directly express the object of help; ② Pronoun Error: The possessive pronoun 〈our〉 is added to clarify the object of help.
error_sentence: And joining the sports activities are few too only five percent.
correct_sentence: And only five percent of students join sports activities.
error: joining the sports activities are few too
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The sentence's expression is verbose and unnecessary; removing 『joining the sports activities are few too』 makes it more concise and fluent. Therefore, it is deleted.
error_sentence: And joining the sports activities are few too only five percent.
correct_sentence: And only five percent of students join sports activities.
correction: of students join sports activities
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence lacks a clear subject and predicate; 『of students join sports activities』 is added after “only five percent” to construct a complete subject-verb-object structure.
error_sentence: I feel very sad,I think exercise is good for the mind and body.
correct_sentence: I feel very sad.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the two independent sentences 〈I feel very sad〉 and “I think...” each contain an independent predicate structure and need to be separated by a period, therefore 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』.
error_sentence: "Old habits die hard.
correct_sentence: "Old habits die hard."
error: "Old
correction: "Old
error_description: Other Error: No modification needed.
error_sentence: "So let's start changing it before it's too late!
correct_sentence: "Old habits die hard." So let's start changing it before it's too late!
error: "So
correction: " So
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Space Error: According to English grammar rules, a space needs to be added between the quotation mark 〈"〉 and the subsequent content 〈So〉, therefore 〈"So〉 is changed to 『 So』.