Writing prompt: British History

Student essay:
Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom .\nBritain is the most powerful period in the 19th century.Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire

Corrected essay:
Called the British, the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland.
In 1535, Wales became a part of the Kingdom of England. Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the Kingdom of Great Britain. Great Britain and Ireland merged in 1800, but Ireland gained independence in 1922. Northern Ireland still stays in the United Kingdom.
Britain was most powerful during the 19th century. After the Industrial Revolution, it beat many who robbed colonial countries such as Spain, the Netherlands and France. The 18th and 19th centuries were the periods when the British national strength was the most powerful. The British have the world's largest colonies where there will always be the sun in its colonies. It was so called the "empire on which the sun never sets."

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Called the British, the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: After the introductory participial phrase 〈Called the British〉, a comma 『,』 is needed to separate it from the main clause 〈the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland〉, so 『,』 is added after 〈British〉 to ensure clarity and readability of the sentence structure.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Called the British, the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland.

error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: Using a comma after 〈Northern Ireland ,〉 immediately before the predicate 〈is〉 disrupts the sentence structure, so 〈,〉 is deleted to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Called the British, the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland.
 In 1535, Wales became a part of the Kingdom of England.
error: .\nIn
correction: .
In
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Other Error: An extraneous backslash 〈\〉 character appears between the period and the newline character here. This character is not a standard writing symbol, so 〈.\nIn〉 is changed to 『. In』 to correctly format the end of the sentence and the beginning of the new paragraph.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: In 1535, Wales became a part of the Kingdom of England.
error: become
correction: Wales became
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; context suggests it means 'In 1535, Wales became a part of the kingdom of England'. The verb 〈become〉 lacks a subject; the sentence needs a subject to indicate the performer of the action, so 『Wales』 is added before 〈become〉 for coherence and grammatical correctness; ② Verb Tense Error: Describing historical facts should use the simple past tense, so 〈become〉 is changed to 『became』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: In 1535, Wales became a part of the Kingdom of England.
error: kingdom
correction: Kingdom
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, proper nouns should be capitalized. 〈kingdom〉 is a proper noun representing an official country name, so it needs to be changed from 〈kingdom〉 to 『Kingdom』 to conform to conventions.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: In 1535, Wales became a part of the Kingdom of England.
error: ,Wales
correction: .
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The subject 『Wales』 has already been added earlier, making 〈Wales〉 here redundant. The preceding sentence can be ended directly with a period 『.』, so 〈,Wales〉 is changed to 『.』 for coherence and grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the Kingdom of Great Britain.
error: kingdom
correction: Kingdom
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, proper nouns should be capitalized. 〈kingdom〉 is a proper noun representing an official country name, so it needs to be changed from 〈kingdom〉 to 『Kingdom』 to conform to conventions.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the Kingdom of Great Britain.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain〉 and 〈Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can stand as separate sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Great Britain and Ireland merged in 1800, but Ireland gained independence in 1922.
correction: merged
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: 〈Great Britain and Ireland in 1800〉 lacks a predicate verb, resulting in an incomplete sentence structure. Context suggests it means 'In 1800, Great Britain and Ireland merged', so 『merged』 is added after 〈Ireland〉 for coherence and grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Great Britain and Ireland merged in 1800, but Ireland gained independence in 1922.
error: merged
correction: , but Ireland gained
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; context suggests it means 'but Ireland gained independence in 1922', so 〈merged〉 is changed to 『, but Ireland gained』 for coherence and grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: Called the British the United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland, is made up of England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland .\nIn 1535, become a part of the kingdom of England,Wales Scotland and England in 1707 formally merged into the kingdom of Great Britain,Great Britain and Ireland in 1800 merged independence in 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom
correct_sentence: Great Britain and Ireland merged in 1800, but Ireland gained independence in 1922. Northern Ireland still stays in the United Kingdom.

error: 1922,Northern Ireland is still stay
correction: 1922. Northern Ireland still stays
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 『but Ireland gained independence in 1922』 and 〈Northern Ireland is still stay in the United Kingdom〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can stand as separate sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, end-of-sentence punctuation should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so 〈1922,Northern〉 is changed to 『1922. Northern』 to conform to conventions; ③ Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; context suggests it means 'Northern Ireland still stays in the United Kingdom', so 〈is still stay〉 is changed to 『still stays』 for coherence and grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: .\nBritain is the most powerful period in the 19th century.
correct_sentence: Northern Ireland still stays in the United Kingdom.
 Britain was most powerful during the 19th century.
error: .\nBritain is the
correction: .
Britain was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Other Error: An extraneous backslash 〈\〉 character appears after the period here. This character is not a standard writing symbol, so 〈\n〉 is deleted to correctly format the end of the sentence and the beginning of the new paragraph; ② Verb Tense Error: Narrating past facts should use the past tense, so 〈is〉 is changed to 『was』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: .\nBritain is the most powerful period in the 19th century.
correct_sentence: Britain was most powerful during the 19th century.
error: period in
correction: during
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: To express 'in a certain period', the preposition 『during』 should be used, indicating Britain's powerful status throughout the 19th century, so 〈in〉 is changed to 『during』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: After the Industrial Revolution, it beat many who robbed colonial countries such as Spain, the Netherlands and France.
error: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob
correction: After the Industrial Revolution, it beat many who robbed
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original expression has a sentence structure error; the sentence structure is confused and incomplete. It needs to be restructured as 『After the Industrial Revolution, it beat many who robbed』 to clearly express the meaning 'After the Industrial Revolution, it defeated many great powers'.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: After the Industrial Revolution, it beat many who robbed colonial countries such as Spain, the Netherlands and France.
error: ,France,
correction: and France.
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: The last item in a series should be connected by the conjunction 『and』, not repeated with a comma, so 〈,France〉 is changed to 『and France』 for coherence and grammatical correctness; ② Punctuation Error: The original sentence is a declarative sentence and is complete, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 to conform to punctuation conventions.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: The 18th and 19th centuries were the periods when the British national strength was the most powerful.
error: century century as the period of
correction: centuries were the periods when
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; context suggests it means 'The 18th and 19th centuries were the periods when British national strength was greatest', so 〈century century as the period of〉 is changed to 『centuries were the periods when』 for coherence and grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: The 18th and 19th centuries were the periods when the British national strength was the most powerful.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: Stating past historical facts should use the past tense, so 〈is〉 is changed to 『was』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: The 18th and 19th centuries were the periods when the British national strength was the most powerful. The British have the world's largest colonies where there will always be the sun in its colonies.
error: , has
correction: . The British have
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 『The 18th and 19th centuries were the periods when the British national strength was the most powerful』 and the following sentence can stand as separate sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』; ② Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence lacks a subject, has confused logic, and unclear meaning; context suggests it means 'The British have the world's largest colonies', so 〈has〉 is changed to 『The British have』 for coherence and grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: The British have the world's largest colonies where there will always be the sun in its colonies.
error: colony when
correction: colonies where
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: Britain possessed multiple colonies, not just one, so 〈colony〉 is changed to 『colonies』 to correctly express the meaning; ② Relative Word Error: 〈when〉 is used to refer to time, but here it refers to 『colonies』 (colonies), which is a place. The correct relative adverb for referring to place is 『where』, so 〈when〉 is changed to 『where』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: The British have the world's largest colonies where there will always be the sun in its colonies.
correction: always
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adverb Error: To express 'always', an adverb of frequency is needed. According to the meaning 'there will always be sun on its colonies', 『always』 needs to be inserted after 〈there will be〉 to emphasize continuity and complete the meaning.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: The British have the world's largest colonies where there will always be the sun in its colonies. It was so called the "empire on which the sun never sets."
error: ,
correction: . It was
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; context suggests it means 'It was called the "empire on which the sun never sets"', so 〈,〉 is changed to 『. It was』 for coherence and grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: Beat after the industrial revolution,many with rob colonial countries such as Spain,the Netherlands,France,The 18th and 19th century century as the period of the British national strength is the most powerful, has the world's largest colony when there will be the sun in its colonies, so called the day not fall empire
correct_sentence: It was so called the "empire on which the sun never sets."
error: day not fall empire
correction: "empire on which the sun never sets."
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; context suggests it means 'It was called the "empire on which the sun never sets"', so 〈day not fall empire〉 is changed to 『"empire on which the sun never sets."』 for coherence and grammatical correctness.