Writing prompt: My History Teacher in Senior High School

Student essay:
The teacher who leave a deeply impression on me in my Senior High school is my history teacher .
On her class you will never fall asleep in.She explains very clearly that what has happened in the past ,and she organized exactly why it happened ,how it happened,and what was its influence to people at that time.Her lessons often begin with some stories or some questions which we need to think of and have a discussion.She awalys leaves us much more time on thinking than just reading the history books.
l lose myself during her class ,l can't help imgaining that I was the one who lived in those years long long before.The sights which were disappear in the history appear once more with the sound of my history teacher.
In a word,my history teacher is really a good teacher,and here,let me show my respect with her.

Corrected essay:
The teacher who leaves a deep impression on me in my Senior High school is my history teacher.
In her class you will never fall asleep. She explains very clearly what has happened in the past, and she organizes exactly why it happened, how it happened, and what its influence was on people at that time. Her lessons often begin with some stories or some questions which we need to think of and have a discussion. She always leaves us much more time for thinking than just reading the history books.
I lose myself during her class. I can't help imagining that I was the one who lived in those years long long before. The sights which disappeared in history appear once more with the sound of my history teacher.
In a word, my history teacher is really a good teacher, and here, let me show my respect for her.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The teacher who leave a deeply impression on me in my Senior High school is my history teacher .

correct_sentence: The teacher who leaves a deep impression on me in my Senior High school is my history teacher.

error: leave a deeply
correction: leaves a deep
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈teacher〉 is in the third-person singular form, and the verb needs to agree in number, so the base form verb 〈leave〉 is changed to the third-person singular form 『leaves』 to comply with English grammar rules; ② PoS Confusion Error: The adverb 〈deeply〉 usually modifies verbs or adjectives, whereas here an adjective is needed to modify the noun 〈impression〉, so it is changed to the adjective 『deep』, making the collocation conform to the fixed expression 『make a deep impression』.
error_sentence: On her class you will never fall asleep in.
correct_sentence: In her class you will never fall asleep.
error: On
correction: In
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to preposition usage norms, the preposition 〈On〉 usually indicates specific dates or surface contact, while here it refers to the classroom environment (scope), so it is changed to 『In』 to conform to the standard collocation 『in the classroom』.
error_sentence: On her class you will never fall asleep in.
correct_sentence: In her class you will never fall asleep.
error: in
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to preposition usage norms, the preposition 〈in〉 at the end of the sentence is repetitive with the preceding structure 〈In her class〉, leading to redundancy; the word is deleted to make the sentence more concise and fluent.
error_sentence: She explains very clearly that what has happened in the past ,and she organized exactly why it happened ,how it happened,and what was its influence to people at that time.
correct_sentence: She explains very clearly what has happened in the past, and she organizes exactly why it happened, how it happened, and what its influence was on people at that time.
error: that
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈what〉 already introduces an object clause, and adding an extra 〈that〉 would cause double conjunction redundancy, so 〈that〉 is deleted to comply with English clause structure rules.
error_sentence: She explains very clearly that what has happened in the past ,and she organized exactly why it happened ,how it happened,and what was its influence to people at that time.
correct_sentence: She explains very clearly what has happened in the past, and she organizes exactly why it happened, how it happened, and what its influence was on people at that time.
error: organized
correction: organizes
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, the context uses the simple present tense to describe the teacher's habitual actions, so the past tense 〈organized〉 is changed to the present tense 『organizes』 to maintain tense consistency, conforming to the customary expression for describing current matters.
error_sentence: She explains very clearly that what has happened in the past ,and she organized exactly why it happened ,how it happened,and what was its influence to people at that time.
correct_sentence: She explains very clearly what has happened in the past, and she organizes exactly why it happened, how it happened, and what its influence was on people at that time.
error: was its influence to
correction: its influence was on
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Order Error: Indirect questions need to follow declarative sentence word order, so the inverted structure 〈was its〉 is adjusted to the normal word order 『its influence was』, conforming to the sentence pattern rule of “ask + question word + subject + predicate”; ② Preposition Error: According to English preposition usage norms, to express “influence on...” the fixed collocation 『have an influence on』 should be used, so 〈to〉 is changed to 『on』 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: She awalys leaves us much more time on thinking than just reading the history books.

correct_sentence: She always leaves us much more time for thinking than just reading the history books.

error: awalys
correction: always
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English expression norms, 〈awalys〉 is misspelled, missing the letter 〈l〉; the correct spelling should be 『always』, expressing “often”, conforming to the standard written form of English adverbs.
error_sentence: She awalys leaves us much more time on thinking than just reading the history books.

correct_sentence: She always leaves us much more time for thinking than just reading the history books.

error: on
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to preposition usage norms, to express “time for...” the preposition 『for』 should be used, so 〈on〉 is changed to 『for』, making 『time for thinking』 conform to English idiomatic collocations.
error_sentence: l lose myself during her class ,l can't help imgaining that I was the one who lived in those years long long before.
correct_sentence: I lose myself during her class.
error: l
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a sentence needs to be capitalized, so the lowercase letter 〈l〉 is changed to the uppercase form 『I』 to ensure the correctness of the sentence structure.
error_sentence: l lose myself during her class ,l can't help imgaining that I was the one who lived in those years long long before.
correct_sentence: I lose myself during her class. I can't help imagining that I was the one who lived in those years long long before.
error: ,l
correction: . I
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: Two independent complete sentences should be separated by a period, not a comma, so the comma 〈,l〉 is changed to a period 『. I』 to avoid a comma splice error; ② Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space is required after a punctuation mark before the next word, so the unspaced connection 〈,l〉 is corrected to the standard form 『. I』 to comply with the rule.
error_sentence: l lose myself during her class ,l can't help imgaining that I was the one who lived in those years long long before.
correct_sentence: I can't help imagining that I was the one who lived in those years long long before.
error: imgaining
correction: imagining
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English expression norms, 〈imgaining〉 is misspelled, missing the letter 〈a〉 and with incorrect letter order; the correct spelling should be 『imagining』, expressing the meaning “to imagine”, conforming to the standard spelling rules for the base form of the verb.
error_sentence: The sights which were disappear in the history appear once more with the sound of my history teacher.

correct_sentence: The sights which disappeared in history appear once more with the sound of my history teacher.

error: were disappear in the
correction: disappeared in
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Voice Error: According to English expression norms, 〈were disappear〉 is a misuse of the passive voice; here, the active voice past tense is needed to express the action, so it is changed to 『disappeared』 to correctly describe an action that happened in the past; ② Preposition Error: According to preposition usage norms, the definite article 〈the〉 in the phrase 〈in the history〉 can be omitted, changing it to 『in history』 to conform to the concise expression habit for referring to historical events in general.
error_sentence: In a word,my history teacher is really a good teacher,and here,let me show my respect with her.
correct_sentence: In a word, my history teacher is really a good teacher, and here, let me show my respect for her.
error: with
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to prepositional phrase usage norms, to express “show respect for someone” the fixed collocation 『show respect for』 should be used, so 〈with〉 is changed to 『for』 to conform to English idiomatic expression.