Writing prompt: The Plan of the Summer Holiday

Student essay:
After half a month,the summer vacation will come.According to my past experience,the summer vacation should lead us have a long time to forget the tired in learning.Nevertheless, in this holiday I will strive to study.With the time flying,I am going to be a student who will Participate in the college entrance examination next year.For this reason,l had to spend more time in studying.
To improve my study,l will take actions in quite a different way.In my plan,l try to do a lot of practice.As the saying goes:From small increments comes abundance.I believe that the more time I spent on learning, more progress I will make.
On the other hand, I will go to cram school so that I can go over my knowledge.By the end of this term do I make a perfect plan.
However,the amusement is also essential for my vacation.Two to three weeks I will spend in traveling.It is good for us to combine learning to entertainment.
To sum up,I'm looking forward to a pleasant holiday,and hope to make progress in learning.

Corrected essay:
After half a month, the summer vacation will come. According to my past experience, the summer vacation should give us a long time to forget the tiredness of learning. Nevertheless, in this holiday I will strive to study. With the time flying, I am going to be a student who will participate in the college entrance examination next year. For this reason, I have to spend more time in studying.
To improve my study, I will take action in quite a different way. In my plan, I will try to do a lot of practice. As the saying goes: From small increments comes abundance. I believe that the more time I spend on learning, the more progress I will make.
On the other hand, I will go to cram school so that I can go over my knowledge. By the end of this term I will make a perfect plan.
However, amusement is also essential for my vacation. I will spend two to three weeks in traveling. It is good for us to combine learning with entertainment.
To sum up, I'm looking forward to a pleasant holiday, and hope to make progress in learning.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: According to my past experience,the summer vacation should lead us have a long time to forget the tired in learning.
correct_sentence: According to my past experience, the summer vacation should give us a long time to forget the tiredness of learning.
error: lead us have
correction: give us
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: Based on the context, the intended meaning is 'the summer vacation should give us enough time to forget the fatigue of learning'; 〈lead us have〉 is not idiomatic English. The correct verb should be 『give』, so 〈lead us have〉 is changed to 『give us』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: According to my past experience,the summer vacation should lead us have a long time to forget the tired in learning.
correct_sentence: According to my past experience, the summer vacation should give us a long time to forget the tiredness of learning.
error: tired in
correction: tiredness of
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: The noun 『tiredness』 should be used here to refer to 'the feeling of fatigue', so 〈tired〉 is changed to 『tiredness』 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Preposition Error: The preposition 『of』 should be used here to indicate possession or source, as in 『the tiredness of learning』 meaning 'the fatigue caused by learning', so 〈in〉 is changed to 『of』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: With the time flying,I am going to be a student who will Participate in the college entrance examination next year.
correct_sentence: With the time flying, I am going to be a student who will participate in the college entrance examination next year.
error: Participate
correction: participate
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: 〈Participate〉 is not a proper noun and is not at the beginning of a sentence, so its first letter should be lowercase; therefore, 〈Participate〉 is changed to 『participate』.
error_sentence: For this reason,l had to spend more time in studying.

correct_sentence: For this reason, I have to spend more time in studying.

error: l had
correction: I have
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect and should be the uppercase letter 『I』; therefore, 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the present tense should be used here, so 〈had〉 is changed to 『have』 to express the current state.
error_sentence: To improve my study,l will take actions in quite a different way.
correct_sentence: To improve my study, I will take action in quite a different way.
error: l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect and should be the uppercase letter 『I』; therefore, 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions.
error_sentence: To improve my study,l will take actions in quite a different way.
correct_sentence: To improve my study, I will take action in quite a different way.
error: actions
correction: action
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The singular form 『action』 should be used here to be consistent with the singular mode of action in the context; therefore, 〈actions〉 is changed to 『action』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: In my plan,l try to do a lot of practice.
correct_sentence: In my plan, I will try to do a lot of practice.
error: l
correction: I will
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect and should be the uppercase letter 『I』; therefore, 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Verb Tense Error: This part expresses a plan and should use the simple future tense; therefore, 『will』 is added after 『I』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I believe that the more time I spent on learning, more progress I will make.

correct_sentence: I believe that the more time I spend on learning, the more progress I will make.

error: spent
correction: spend
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the present tense should be used here, so 〈spent〉 is changed to 『spend』 to express the current state.
error_sentence: I believe that the more time I spent on learning, more progress I will make.

correct_sentence: I believe that the more time I spend on learning, the more progress I will make.

correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The structure here is 'the more... the more...', so 『the』 is added before the second 〈more〉 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: By the end of this term do I make a perfect plan.

correct_sentence: By the end of this term I will make a perfect plan.

error: do I
correction: I will
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: Based on the context, the intended meaning is 'At the end of this term, I will make a perfect plan', so 〈do I〉 is changed to 『I will』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: However,the amusement is also essential for my vacation.
correct_sentence: However, amusement is also essential for my vacation.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈amusement〉 is used in a general sense, so 〈the〉 is deleted to make the sentence more grammatically correct.
error_sentence: Two to three weeks I will spend in traveling.
correct_sentence: I will spend two to three weeks in traveling.
error: Two
correction: I will spend two
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: Based on the context, the intended meaning is 'I will spend two to three weeks traveling', so 〈Two〉 is changed to 『I will spend two』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: Two to three weeks I will spend in traveling.
correct_sentence: I will spend two to three weeks in traveling.
error: I will spend
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The corrected sentence already uses 『I will spend』 earlier, so 〈I will spend〉 after 〈weeks〉 is deleted to make the sentence structure correct.
error_sentence: It is good for us to combine learning to entertainment.

correct_sentence: It is good for us to combine learning with entertainment.

error: to
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The structure 'combine... with...' should be used here to express the meaning of combining learning with entertainment, so 〈to〉 is changed to 『with』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: To sum up,I'm looking forward to a pleasant holiday,and hope to make progress in learning.
correct_sentence: To sum up, I'm looking forward to a pleasant holiday, and hope to make progress in learning.
error: I'm
correction: I'm