Writing prompt: Online Shopping

Student essay:
Many people are fond to go shopping on the Internet these days, especially the young teenagers. It's sure that online shopping is popular. It's quite convenient to buy anything.
Recently, there are some opinions from people who are interesting about online shopping. Xiao Ming, a school student, likes going shopping. He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested him to buy books from Dang website. "It's really cool and cheap. I don't need to go out to buy anything." says Xiao Ming. Though it is highly popular around teenagers, some parents prefer to go shopping in the supermarket. They think the quality of the clothes on the Internet is too terrible.
Everything has two sides. Although there are some defects, the way of shopping also helps us to buy things easily. In my opinion, we can buy basic things from the credible stores on the Internet.

Corrected essay:
Many people are fond of going shopping on the Internet these days, especially young teenagers. It's sure that online shopping is popular. It's quite convenient to buy anything.
Recently, there have been some opinions from people who are interested in online shopping. Xiao Ming, a school student, likes going shopping. He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested he buy books from the Dang website. "It's really cool and cheap. I don't need to go out to buy anything", says Xiao Ming. Though it is highly popular among teenagers, some parents prefer to go shopping in the supermarket. They think the quality of the clothes on the Internet is too terrible.
Everything has two sides. Although there are some defects, this way of shopping also helps us to buy things easily. In my opinion, we can buy basic things from credible stores on the Internet.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Many people are fond to go shopping on the Internet these days, especially the young teenagers.
correct_sentence: Many people are fond of going shopping on the Internet these days, especially young teenagers.
error: to go
correction: of going
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the fixed phrase “be fond of” means “to like...”, so the preposition 〈to〉 needs to be changed to 『of』 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, in the phrase “be fond of”, the preposition “of” should be followed by a gerund as its object, so the verb infinitive 〈go〉 needs to be changed to 『going』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Many people are fond to go shopping on the Internet these days, especially the young teenagers.
correct_sentence: Many people are fond of going shopping on the Internet these days, especially young teenagers.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the plural form of a countable noun should be used to refer generically to a group, and no definite article is needed before the generic object. Therefore, the definite article 〈the〉 before 〈young teenagers〉 needs to be deleted to correctly refer generically to "young teenagers".
error_sentence: Recently, there are some opinions from people who are interesting about online shopping.
correct_sentence: Recently, there have been some opinions from people who are interested in online shopping.
error: are
correction: have been
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, the adverb “recently” is usually paired with the present perfect tense to indicate a continuous state and can be seen as a marker for the present perfect tense. Therefore, the predicate verb 〈are〉 needs to be changed to the present perfect tense 『have been』 to match the context's tense.
error_sentence: Recently, there are some opinions from people who are interesting about online shopping.
correct_sentence: Recently, there have been some opinions from people who are interested in online shopping.
error: interesting about
correction: interested in
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Adjective Error: According to English grammar rules, the adjective “interesting” means “causing interest”, while “interested” should be used when the subject is a person; here, the misused 〈interesting〉 needs to be changed to 『interested』 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the fixed phrase “be interested in something” means “to be interested in something”, so the preposition 〈about〉 needs to be changed to 『in』 to fit the fixed phrase.
error_sentence: He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested him to buy books from Dang website.
correct_sentence: He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested he buy books from the Dang website.
error: him to
correction: he
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, an object clause follows 〈suggested〉. And according to English syntax rules, the subject of an object clause needs to be a nominative pronoun. Therefore, the objective pronoun 〈him〉 needs to be changed to the nominative pronoun 『He』 to comply with English syntax rules; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb “suggest” is followed by an object clause, the subjunctive mood should be used, with the structure “suggest (that) + subject + base form of the verb”; therefore, the redundant infinitive marker 〈to〉 needs to be deleted to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested him to buy books from Dang website.
correct_sentence: He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested he buy books from the Dang website.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the proper noun 〈Dang website〉 in the original text requires a definite article before it to indicate specificity. Therefore, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added before 〈Dang website〉 to indicate specificity and comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I don't need to go out to buy anything."
correct_sentence: I don't need to go out to buy anything", says Xiao Ming.
error: ."
correction: ",
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when a direct quotation is followed by the speaker, no punctuation mark is needed before the closing quotation mark at the end of the direct quotation, but a comma is needed after the closing quotation mark to introduce the following speaker. Therefore, 〈."〉 needs to be changed to 『",』 to comply with English writing conventions.
error_sentence: Though it is highly popular around teenagers, some parents prefer to go shopping in the supermarket.
correct_sentence: Though it is highly popular among teenagers, some parents prefer to go shopping in the supermarket.
error: around
correction: among
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "among the group of teenagers...", and according to English grammar rules, the preposition “among” should be used to indicate being within a group of "three or more". Therefore, the preposition 〈around〉 needs to be changed to 『among』 to match the original meaning and English grammar rules.
error_sentence: Although there are some defects, the way of shopping also helps us to buy things easily.
correct_sentence: Although there are some defects, this way of shopping also helps us to buy things easily.
error: the
correction: this
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, this refers to the shopping method already mentioned earlier. According to English expression habits, “the way” is usually a generic reference, meaning “the manner of...”, and specific usage typically requires a restrictive clause after “the way” for further qualification. However, the demonstrative pronoun “this + noun” can directly refer to something previously mentioned. Therefore, the definite article 〈the〉 needs to be changed to the demonstrative pronoun 『this』 to fit the original context and English expression habits.
error_sentence: In my opinion, we can buy basic things from the credible stores on the Internet.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, we can buy basic things from credible stores on the Internet.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when the plural countable noun 〈credible stores〉 in the original text is used for generic reference, no article is needed before it for limitation. Therefore, the definite article 〈the〉 before 〈credible stores〉 needs to be deleted for generic reference to comply with grammatical rules.