Writing prompt: Anxiety Before Exams

Student essay:
Recently,many students find themselves frequently dizzy and lack of energy.Some even have difficulty getting abundant sleep and arousing their appetite,which has bad influence on their daily study.
As we prepare for the exam,we should get both our mind and body ready.Above all,a carefully designed revise timetable always help.What's more,we should break the balance between study and rest by no means,even caught in hard work.Last but not least,it can be a wise choice to have a bath or have warm milk in order to relieve stress and get high qualified sleep.
In my opinion,we should attach great importance to keeping health from the perspective of the immediate interest.

Corrected essay:
Recently, many students find themselves frequently dizzy and lacking energy. Some even have difficulty getting abundant sleep and arousing their appetite, which has a bad influence on their daily study.
As we prepare for the exam, we should get both our mind and body ready. Above all, a carefully designed revision timetable always helps. What's more, we should by no means break the balance between study and rest, even when caught in hard work. Last but not least, it can be a wise choice to have a bath or have warm milk in order to relieve stress and get high-quality sleep.
In my opinion, we should attach great importance to keeping healthy from the perspective of immediate interest.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Recently,many students find themselves frequently dizzy and lack of energy.
correct_sentence: Recently, many students find themselves frequently dizzy and lacking energy.
error: lack of
correction: lacking
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion: In the original sentence, 〈lack of〉 is a noun phrase. In the structure 〈find themselves frequently dizzy and lack of energy〉, it needs to be parallel with the adjective 〈dizzy〉 to describe the state of the subject 〈students〉. According to the rule that "find themselves" is followed by an adjective/participle, the present participle form should be used here, so 〈lack of〉 is changed to the present participle 『lacking』; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: After the adjective 〈dizzy〉, the present participle 〈lacking〉 should be used to describe the state of the subject 〈students〉. The original sentence's use of the noun phrase 〈lack of〉 does not conform to grammatical rules; it is changed to 『lacking』 to make the sentence grammatically correct and its structure conform to the expression "find oneself + adjective/participle".
error_sentence: Some even have difficulty getting abundant sleep and arousing their appetite,which has bad influence on their daily study.

correct_sentence: Some even have difficulty getting abundant sleep and arousing their appetite, which has a bad influence on their daily study.

correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Determiner Error: In English, singular countable nouns usually require a determiner. In the original sentence "has bad influence", the abstract noun 〈influence〉, used in a specific context, represents a singular concept and lacks a determiner. According to grammatical rules, 『a』 is added to form 〈a bad influence〉, making the sentence's expression conform to English grammatical requirements.
error_sentence: Above all,a carefully designed revise timetable always help.
correct_sentence: Above all, a carefully designed revision timetable always helps.
error: revise
correction: revision
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion: In the original sentence, 〈revise〉 is a verb and cannot directly modify the noun 〈timetable〉. According to English grammatical rules, when a noun modifies another noun, the noun form is needed. Therefore, 〈revise〉 should be changed to the noun 『revision』 to form the compound noun 〈revision timetable〉, making the sentence grammatically correct.
error_sentence: Above all,a carefully designed revise timetable always help.
correct_sentence: Above all, a carefully designed revision timetable always helps.
error: help
correction: helps
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: In the original sentence, the subject 〈a carefully designed revision timetable〉 is singular. According to English grammatical rules, when the subject is third-person singular, the verb needs to be in its corresponding singular form. The verb 〈help〉 in the original sentence does not agree with the number of the subject and should be changed to 『helps』 to make the sentence conform to subject-verb agreement grammatical norms.
error_sentence: What's more,we should break the balance between study and rest by no means,even caught in hard work.
correct_sentence: What's more, we should by no means break the balance between study and rest, even when caught in hard work.
correction: by no means
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Order Error: According to English grammatical rules, the emphatic adverbial phrase 〈by no means〉 should immediately follow the auxiliary verb to emphasize the negative meaning. In the original sentence, the position of 〈by no means〉 is improper, leading to semantic confusion; it is moved after 〈should〉 to form 『should by no means break』, conforming to English word order requirements; ② Conjunction Error: The use of conjunctions in the original sentence failed to accurately express the meaning. To emphasize the negative meaning, 〈break the balance〉 needs to be reasonably combined with the adverbial phrase 〈by no means〉. The adjustment makes the sentence's meaning clear and coherent, conforming to English expression habits.
error_sentence: What's more,we should break the balance between study and rest by no means,even caught in hard work.
correct_sentence: What's more, we should by no means break the balance between study and rest, even when caught in hard work.
error: by no means
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: In the original sentence, 〈by no means〉 is redundant in its original position due to word order adjustment. According to English expression habits, to make the sentence concise and fluent, the redundant 〈by no means〉 is deleted and moved to an appropriate position to achieve semantic emphasis, avoiding repetition and semantic confusion.
error_sentence: What's more,we should break the balance between study and rest by no means,even caught in hard work.
correct_sentence: What's more, we should by no means break the balance between study and rest, even when caught in hard work.
correction: when
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: In the original sentence, 〈even caught in hard work〉 is an abbreviated form of a temporal adverbial clause, but the omission of the conjunction leads to an incomplete clause structure. According to English grammatical rules, an adverbial clause requires a conjunction to clarify the logical relationship; adding 『when』 to form 〈even when caught〉 makes the temporal adverbial clause's connective relationship clear and conforms to grammatical requirements.
error_sentence: Last but not least,it can be a wise choice to have a bath or have warm milk in order to relieve stress and get high qualified sleep.

correct_sentence: Last but not least, it can be a wise choice to have a bath or have warm milk in order to relieve stress and get high-quality sleep.

error: qualified
correction: -quality
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion: In the original sentence, 〈qualified〉 is a past participle of a verb, and its meaning does not fit the context of “high-quality sleep”. According to English grammatical rules, an adjective is needed here to modify 〈sleep〉; it is changed to the compound word 『high-quality』, forming the compound adjective 〈high-quality sleep〉 with a hyphen, accurately expressing the meaning of high sleep quality, making the sentence grammatically correct and its meaning clear.
error_sentence: In my opinion,we should attach great importance to keeping health from the perspective of the immediate interest.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, we should attach great importance to keeping healthy from the perspective of immediate interest.
error: health
correction: healthy
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion: According to the "keep + adj." grammatical rule, in the structure 〈keeping health〉, "keeping" needs to be followed by an adjective as an object complement to describe the state. In the original sentence, 〈health〉 is a noun; the noun 〈health〉 should be changed to the adjective 『healthy』 to make the sentence grammatically correct and conform to expression habits.
error_sentence: In my opinion,we should attach great importance to keeping health from the perspective of the immediate interest.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, we should attach great importance to keeping healthy from the perspective of immediate interest.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: According to English grammatical rules, definite articles are generally not used before abstract concepts. In the original sentence 〈from the perspective of the immediate interest〉, 〈the immediate interest〉 is an abstract phrase; in a generic context, the definite article 〈the〉 is not needed. The redundant 〈the〉 should be deleted to conform to English grammatical rules and make the expression more concise.