Writing prompt: As Humble as a Lamb

Student essay:
To most of us, Newton is such a great scientist as he changed our reception of the world in depth.
As a genius, his three laws of motion is still used in almost every part in our life. However, Newton was never proud of what he had created but just remained humble. His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous. At the same time, Newton never stopped trying to know more just like a lamb that is curious about everything new. He described himself as a boy who was collecting shells on the beach but knew nothing about the ocean in front of him. So he didn't stop working hard.
In the history appeared so many great person but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, but Newton did. So it is why I regard him as my idol.

Corrected essay:
To most of us, Newton is such a great scientist as he changed our perception of the world in depth.
As a genius, his three laws of motion are still used in almost every part of our lives. However, Newton was never proud of what he had created but just remained humble. His famous words, "If I can see a bit further than others, it is because I'm standing on the shoulders of giants." show such great humility, and maybe that's why he is so famous. At the same time, Newton never stops trying to know more, just like a lamb that is curious about everything new. He described himself as a boy who was collecting shells on the beach but knew nothing about the ocean in front of him. So he didn't stop working hard.
In the history, so many great people have appeared, but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, yet Newton was. So, that is why I regard him as my idol.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: To most of us, Newton is such a great scientist as he changed our reception of the world in depth.

correct_sentence: To most of us, Newton is such a great scientist as he changed our perception of the world in depth.

error: reception
correction: perception
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the sentence meaning, the original sentence intends to express that Newton changed our “cognition” of the world. However, 〈reception〉 means “reception; receiving”, which does not fit the context. 『perception』 means “cognition; perception”, so based on the word meaning, 〈reception〉 should be changed to 『perception』 to accurately convey the semantics.
error_sentence: As a genius, his three laws of motion is still used in almost every part in our life.
correct_sentence: As a genius, his three laws of motion are still used in almost every part of our lives.
error: is
correction: are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the subject 〈three laws of motion〉 is plural, and the predicate verb should agree with it in number. In the original sentence, the predicate verb 〈is〉 does not match the number of the subject, resulting in a subject-verb disagreement. Therefore, 〈is〉 should be changed to 『are』 to ensure subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: As a genius, his three laws of motion is still used in almost every part in our life.
correct_sentence: As a genius, his three laws of motion are still used in almost every part of our lives.
error: in our life
correction: of our lives
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocations, to express “the part of…”, 〈part of〉 should be used. In the original sentence 〈in our life〉, the use of 〈in〉 is incorrect; it should be changed to 『of』; ② Noun Number Error: According to the context, this generally refers to “various aspects of our lives”. The noun 〈life〉, as a countable noun, needs to be in the plural form. In the original sentence, 〈life〉 is in the singular form, which is incorrect; it should be changed to 『lives』.
error_sentence: His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous.
correct_sentence: His famous words, "If I can see a bit further than others, it is because I'm standing on the shoulders of giants."
error: word '
correction: words, "
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, this refers to Newton's famous saying. 〈word〉 means a single “word”; the plural form 『words』, meaning “remarks” or “sayings”, should be used. In the original sentence, 〈word〉 is in the singular form, which is incorrect; ② Punctuation Error: Direct quotes in a sentence should be enclosed in double quotation marks "", and separated from the main clause by a comma. The punctuation in the original sentence is incorrect; 〈word '〉 should be changed to 『words, "』 to comply with English punctuation rules.
error_sentence: His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous.
correct_sentence: His famous words, "If I can see a bit further than others, it is because I'm standing on the shoulders of giants."
error: farther
correction: further
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adjective Error: According to English vocabulary usage, 〈farther〉 is mainly used to describe physical distance, while “see farther” in the original sentence is an abstract concept, so 『further』 should be used. The use of 〈farther〉 in the original sentence does not fit the context; this is an error in adjective semantic discrimination.
error_sentence: His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous.
correct_sentence: His famous words, "If I can see a bit further than others, it is because I'm standing on the shoulders of giants."
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when a noun phrase refers to something specific, a definite article is required. In the original sentence, 〈shoulders of giants〉 specifically refers to the shoulders of giants, so the definite article 〈the〉 should be added. The original sentence lacks a definite article, which does not comply with the rules for using articles with specific nouns in English.
error_sentence: His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous.
correct_sentence: His famous words, "If I can see a bit further than others, it is because I'm standing on the shoulders of giants." show such great humility, and maybe that's why he is so famous.
error: ' shows
correction: ." show
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: When a direct quote ends, a period is needed, and the quotation mark should be placed outside the period. The punctuation in the original sentence is incorrect; 〈' shows〉 should be changed to 『." show』 to comply with English punctuation rules; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the subject 〈words〉 is plural, so the predicate verb needs to agree with it. In the original sentence, 〈shows〉 is in the third-person singular form and should be changed to the plural form 『show』.
error_sentence: His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous.
correct_sentence: show such great humility, and maybe that's why he is so famous.
error: and,
correction: , and
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, when connecting independent clauses, the comma should be placed before the conjunction 〈and〉. In the original sentence, the punctuation of 〈and,〉 is incorrect; the comma should be moved before 〈and〉, changing it to 『, and』, to comply with English punctuation usage rules.
error_sentence: His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous.
correct_sentence: show such great humility, and maybe that's why he is so famous.
error: was
correction: is
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, Newton's fame is a currently existing fact and should be in the present tense. The use of the past tense 〈was〉 in the original sentence does not fit the semantics. According to English grammar rules, 〈was〉 needs to be changed to the present tense 『is』 to maintain consistency between tense and context.
error_sentence: At the same time, Newton never stopped trying to know more just like a lamb that is curious about everything new.
correct_sentence: At the same time, Newton never stops trying to know more, just like a lamb that is curious about everything new.
error: stopped
correction: stops
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, this describes Newton's continuous, ever-present behavioral trait, which is a general fact and should be in the present tense. The use of the past tense 〈stopped〉 in the original sentence does not fit the semantics. According to English grammar rules, 〈stopped〉 needs to be changed to the present tense 『stops』 to maintain consistency between tense and context.
error_sentence: At the same time, Newton never stopped trying to know more just like a lamb that is curious about everything new.
correct_sentence: At the same time, Newton never stops trying to know more, just like a lamb that is curious about everything new.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation usage rules, a comma is needed before a comparative adverbial clause “just like...” to separate it from the main clause, making the sentence structure clearer. The original sentence is missing a comma between 〈know more just like〉; a comma 『,』 should be added after 〈more〉 to comply with the punctuation rules for adverbial components in English.
error_sentence: In the history appeared so many great person but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, but Newton did.
correct_sentence: In the history, so many great people have appeared, but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, yet Newton was.
error: appeared
correction: ,
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: In the beginning of the sentence 〈In the history appeared〉, the adverbial phrase 〈In the history〉 is at the start of the sentence and lacks a separating comma. According to English sentence structure rules, a comma 『,』 should be added after 〈history〉 to make the sentence structure clearer; ② Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence uses an incorrect inverted structure, leading to a confusing sentence structure. 〈appeared〉 needs to be moved after the subject to form a standard sentence pattern.
error_sentence: In the history appeared so many great person but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, but Newton did.
correct_sentence: In the history, so many great people have appeared, but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, yet Newton was.
error: person
correction: people have appeared,
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, this refers to multiple great people. 〈person〉 is singular and should be changed to the plural form 『people』 to accurately express the meaning; ② Verb Tense Error: The original sentence uses the simple past tense 〈appeared〉, which does not effectively reflect the continuing impact of historical events on the present. The present perfect tense 『have appeared』 should be used as it is more consistent with the context, emphasizing the connection of the fact that many great people have appeared over the time span from the past to the present to the current situation.
error_sentence: In the history appeared so many great person but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, but Newton did.
correct_sentence: In the history, so many great people have appeared, but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, yet Newton was.
error: but Newton did
correction: yet Newton was
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: In the original sentence, the preceding and succeeding clauses have a contrastive relationship. Since 〈but〉 has already been used, using 〈but〉 again here seems repetitive. According to English expression habits, 〈yet〉 should be used as a replacement to make the expression more natural; ② Verb Choice Error: The preceding text mentions “to be humble”. In the original sentence, 〈did〉 cannot accurately correspond to the predicative structure of the preceding text; 〈was〉 should be used to match the grammatical structure and semantics of the preceding text.
error_sentence: So it is why I regard him as my idol.
correct_sentence: So, that is why I regard him as my idol.
error: it
correction: , that
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, when using 〈So〉 at the beginning of a sentence to introduce it, a comma should be added after it to indicate a pause in tone, making the sentence expression more natural and smooth. The original sentence is missing a comma after 〈So〉; ② Pronoun Error: In the original sentence, the reference of 〈it〉 is unclear. Using 〈that〉 can more clearly refer to the content mentioned in the preceding text, making the sentence meaning clearer and conforming to English expression habits.