Writing prompt: Summer Vacation

Student essay:
Here comes summer. We have worked hard for a whole term.Many students feel a bit tired, including me.
For this reason, my family advise me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in summer vacation. My father told me that my cousin would show us around the West Lake.
It is said that the scene of the West Lake is extremely fascinating and magnificent. According to our plan,we will spend a week on this trip. It is suggested that we should get ready for it ahead of time. Therefore,we booked the ticket for the train and purchase some present that cannot be found there for my cousin's family.From my perspective,we will have a good time.
I will also review what I have learnt at this term and what we will learn the next term. I hope that my summer vacation will be relaxing and meaningful.

Corrected essay:
Here comes summer. We have worked hard for a whole term. Many students feel a bit tired, including me.
For this reason, my family advises me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in the summer vacation. My father told me that my cousin would show us around the West Lake.
It is said that the scene of the West Lake is extremely fascinating and magnificent. According to our plan, we will spend a week on this trip. It is suggested that we should get ready for it ahead of time. Therefore, we booked the ticket for the train and purchased some presents that cannot be found there for my cousin's family. From my perspective, we will have a good time.
I will also review what I have learnt this term and what we will learn next term. I hope that my summer vacation will be relaxing and meaningful.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: For this reason, my family advise me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in summer vacation.
correct_sentence: For this reason, my family advises me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in the summer vacation.
error: advise
correction: advises
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈my family〉 is singular in this sentence; according to subject-verb agreement, the verb 〈advise〉 should be in the third-person singular form 『advises』, so 〈advise〉 is changed to 『advises』.
error_sentence: For this reason, my family advise me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in summer vacation.
correct_sentence: For this reason, my family advises me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in the summer vacation.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when referring to a specific holiday 〈summer vacation〉, the determiner 『the』 should be added for definite reference.
error_sentence: Therefore,we booked the ticket for the train and purchase some present that cannot be found there for my cousin's family.
correct_sentence: Therefore, we booked the ticket for the train and purchased some presents that cannot be found there for my cousin's family.
error: purchase some present
correction: purchased some presents
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: Based on the context, 〈purchase〉 should be consistent with the past tense of the preceding verb 〈booked〉 and should be changed to the past tense form 『purchased』; ② Noun Number Error: 〈present〉 in this context refers to multiple gifts and should be changed to its plural form 『presents』.
error_sentence: I will also review what I have learnt at this term and what we will learn the next term.
correct_sentence: I will also review what I have learnt this term and what we will learn next term.
error: at
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the phrase 〈this term〉 does not require a preposition when used as an adverbial of time; therefore, the redundant preposition 〈at〉 should be deleted.
error_sentence: I will also review what I have learnt at this term and what we will learn the next term.
correct_sentence: I will also review what I have learnt this term and what we will learn next term.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when expressing the time phrase 〈next term〉, the determiner 〈the〉 is unnecessary; therefore, the redundant definite article 〈the〉 should be deleted.