Writing prompt: Being a Good Listener

Student essay:
Now, if you want to be a good listener I can give you some good advice.
First, when someone talk to you, you should always smile. Sometimes, you can nod your head that can show you listen carefully. Then if your friends speak to a long time you can't watch your watch, you should keep your patience. Second, when they talk, you'd better face to they and look at their eyes. To show your respect to them It's important that if you want to talk when someone talking, you should listen to his words over and then you can show your opinions. Don't put in a word.
Both of all become a good listener. The Parents can understand their children to eliminate the generation gap. Teachers can meet the demand of students. The students can help each other and can promote the friendship
So I think to be a good listener is very important. Flowing these ways you can be a good listener.

Corrected essay:
Now, if you want to be a good listener, I can give you some good advice.
First, when someone talks to you, you should always smile. Sometimes, you can nod your head to show you are listening carefully. Then, if your friends speak for a long time, you shouldn't watch your watch; you should keep your patience. Second, when they talk, you'd better face them and look into their eyes to show your respect. It's important that if you want to talk when someone is talking, you should listen to their words first and then share your opinions. Don't put in a word.
Both help you become a good listener. Parents can understand their children to eliminate the generation gap. Teachers can meet the demands of students. Students can help each other and promote friendship.
So, I think being a good listener is very important. Following these ways, you can be a good listener.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Now, if you want to be a good listener I can give you some good advice.

correct_sentence: Now, if you want to be a good listener, I can give you some good advice.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, a comma is needed to separate the conditional adverbial clause 〈if you want to be a good listener〉 from the main clause, so 『,』 is added to ensure clear sentence structure.
error_sentence: First, when someone talk to you, you should always smile.
correct_sentence: First, when someone talks to you, you should always smile.
error: talk
correction: talks
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈someone〉 is third-person singular; according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb should be in the singular form, so the plural verb 〈talk〉 is changed to the singular form 『talks』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: Sometimes, you can nod your head that can show you listen carefully.
correct_sentence: Sometimes, you can nod your head to show you are listening carefully.
error: that can
correction: to
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence's use of the relative clause 〈that can show〉 is verbose; according to English expression habits, it is changed to the infinitive phrase 『to show』, using an infinitive structure to express purpose, making the sentence more concise and fluent.
error_sentence: Sometimes, you can nod your head that can show you listen carefully.
correct_sentence: Sometimes, you can nod your head to show you are listening carefully.
error: listen
correction: are listening
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the contextual meaning, the context here emphasizes the continuous nature of the action "are listening," so the present continuous tense 『are listening』 is needed instead of the simple present tense 〈listen〉 to meet tense expression requirements.
error_sentence: Then if your friends speak to a long time you can't watch your watch, you should keep your patience.
correct_sentence: Then, if your friends speak for a long time, you shouldn't watch your watch; you should keep your patience.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression norms, a comma is needed to separate the adverbial clause 〈if your friends speak for a long time〉 from the main clause, therefore a comma is inserted to make it 『if your friends speak for a long time,』 to comply with English punctuation norms.
error_sentence: Then if your friends speak to a long time you can't watch your watch, you should keep your patience.
correct_sentence: Then, if your friends speak for a long time, you shouldn't watch your watch; you should keep your patience.
error: to
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to prepositional phrase usage norms, the correct preposition to express duration of time should be 『for』 instead of 〈to〉, therefore the incorrect collocation 〈to a long time〉 is corrected to 『for a long time』 to comply with English grammar rules.
error_sentence: Then if your friends speak to a long time you can't watch your watch, you should keep your patience.
correct_sentence: Then, if your friends speak for a long time, you shouldn't watch your watch; you should keep your patience.
error: you ca
correction: , you should
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression norms, a comma is missing between the adverbial clause and the main clause, leading to structural ambiguity; a comma needs to be added to make it 『 if your friends speak for a long time,』 to clearly demarcate them; ② Other Error: According to the contextual meaning, 〈can't〉 expresses a limitation of ability, whereas the context requires conveying the meaning of "it is advisable not to," therefore it is changed to 『shouldn't』 to accurately convey the semantics.
error_sentence: Then if your friends speak to a long time you can't watch your watch, you should keep your patience.
correct_sentence: Then, if your friends speak for a long time, you shouldn't watch your watch; you should keep your patience.
error: ,
correction: ;
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression norms, two independent main clauses 〈you shouldn't watch your watch〉 and 〈you should keep...〉 should be connected by a semicolon, therefore the comma is changed to a semicolon to make it 『your watch; you should』 to comply with English compound sentence punctuation rules.
error_sentence: Second, when they talk, you'd better face to they and look at their eyes.
correct_sentence: Second, when they talk, you'd better face them and look into their eyes to show your respect.
error: to they
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English transitive verb usage rules, the verb 〈face〉 as a transitive verb can directly take an object and does not require the preposition 〈to〉, so the redundant preposition is deleted to conform to correct grammatical structure; ② Pronoun Error: According to English expression norms, the objective case of a pronoun is required after a preposition, therefore the nominative pronoun 〈they〉 is changed to the objective form 『them』, forming the correct collocation 『face them』.
error_sentence: Second, when they talk, you'd better face to they and look at their eyes.
correct_sentence: Second, when they talk, you'd better face them and look into their eyes to show your respect.
error: at
correction: into
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to prepositional phrase usage norms, the English fixed collocation should be 『look into someone's eyes』 meaning "to gaze into the eyes," therefore the incorrect preposition 〈at〉 is corrected to 『into』 to conform to idiomatic expression and better express the action of gazing.
error_sentence: Second, when they talk, you'd better face to they and look at their eyes. To show your respect to them It's important that if you want to talk when someone talking, you should listen to his words over
correct_sentence: Second, when they talk, you'd better face them and look into their eyes to show your respect.
error: . To
correction: to
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence incorrectly uses an infinitive phrase as an independent sentence; according to English grammar rules, it should be connected to the preceding sentence, therefore the period is deleted and the initial capital letter 『To』 is changed to lowercase 『to』; ② Case Error: According to English expression norms, the lowercase 『to』 within the sentence should remain in lowercase form, consistent with the infinitive structure.
error_sentence: To show your respect to them It's important that if you want to talk when someone talking, you should listen to his words over
correct_sentence: Second, when they talk, you'd better face them and look into their eyes to show your respect.
error: to them
correction: .
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression norms, 〈to them〉 is semantically redundant with the preceding 〈show your respect〉; after deletion, the word order is adjusted to make the expression more concise.
error_sentence: To show your respect to them It's important that if you want to talk when someone talking, you should listen to his words over
correct_sentence: It's important that if you want to talk when someone is talking, you should listen to their words first and then share your opinions.
correction: is
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English expression norms, the clause 〈when someone talking〉 is missing an auxiliary verb; according to the rules for forming the present continuous tense, the auxiliary verb 『is』 should be added to form the present continuous tense, creating the complete structure 『when someone is talking』.
error_sentence: To show your respect to them It's important that if you want to talk when someone talking, you should listen to his words over
correct_sentence: It's important that if you want to talk when someone is talking, you should listen to their words first and then share your opinions.
error: his words over
correction: their words first
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: Using the plural pronoun 〈their〉 to refer to a general group of people is more in line with modern English usage norms, therefore the singular 〈his〉 is changed to the plural form 『their』; ② Adjective Error: According to the needs of expressing the sentence meaning, the adverb of place 〈over〉 is changed to 『first』 to more accurately convey the meaning of “firstly,” making the expression more logical.
error_sentence: and then you can show your opinions.
correct_sentence: It's important that if you want to talk when someone is talking, you should listen to their words first and then share your opinions.
error: you can show
correction: share
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: The preceding text already uses 〈you should〉 to express a suggestion, and the subsequent repetition of 〈you can〉 causes semantic redundancy. According to the principle of conciseness in English expression, the redundant 〈you can〉 is deleted, retaining only the core predicate verb; ② Verb Choice Error: The verb 〈show〉 usually means "to display," whereas the context here requires expressing the meaning of "sharing opinions." According to the requirement for semantic accuracy, it is changed to the more appropriate 『share』 to correctly convey the sentence meaning.
error_sentence: Both of all become a good listener.
correct_sentence: Both help you become a good listener.
error: of all
correction: help you
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The phrase 〈Both of all〉 does not conform to idiomatic English expression and contains a logical error. It is changed to the complete subject-verb-object structure 『Both help you』, which both preserves the original meaning and conforms to grammatical norms.
error_sentence: The Parents can understand their children to eliminate the generation gap.
correct_sentence: Both help you become a good listener. Parents can understand their children to eliminate the generation gap.
error: The
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: As a noun referring to the general group of parents, 〈Parents〉 does not require a definite article according to English grammar rules. Therefore, the superfluous 『The』 is deleted, starting directly with 『Parents』.
error_sentence: Teachers can meet the demand of students.
correct_sentence: Teachers can meet the demands of students.
error: demand
correction: demands
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar norms, 〈demand〉 as a countable noun should be in the plural form when expressing "multiple needs." According to the principle of noun number consistency, it is changed to 『demands』.
error_sentence: The students can help each other and can promote the friendship

correct_sentence: Students can help each other and promote friendship.

error: The students
correction: Students
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: In the sentence, 〈students〉 refers to the general group of students; according to English article usage rules, the unnecessary definite article 『The』 is deleted to make the sentence more concise and fluent.
error_sentence: The students can help each other and can promote the friendship

correct_sentence: Students can help each other and promote friendship.

error: can promote the friendship
correction: promote friendship.
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression norms, the modal verb 〈can〉 has already been used previously; here, the repeated 〈can〉 is deleted to keep the sentence structure concise; ② Determiner Error: According to determiner usage norms, 〈friendship〉 as an abstract uncountable noun, the redundant definite article 『the』 is deleted, maintaining the correct form 『promote friendship』.
error_sentence: So I think to be a good listener is very important.
correct_sentence: So, I think being a good listener is very important.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When the transition word 〈So〉 is at the beginning of a sentence, according to English punctuation rules, it needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added to form the correct structure 『So, you will...』.
error_sentence: So I think to be a good listener is very important.
correct_sentence: So, I think being a good listener is very important.
error: to be
correction: being
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: While the infinitive 〈to be〉 as a subject is grammatically correct, it is not natural enough. According to idiomatic English expression, it is changed to the gerund form 『being』 at the beginning, making the sentence 『being a good listener...』 more in line with native speaker expression habits.
error_sentence: Flowing these ways you can be a good listener.
correct_sentence: Following these ways, you can be a good listener.
error: Flowing
correction: Following
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈Flowing〉 is the present participle form of the verb “flow,” whereas the context here requires 『Following』, meaning “to adhere to.” Based on semantic differentiation, it is corrected to the proper spelling.
error_sentence: Flowing these ways you can be a good listener.
correct_sentence: Following these ways, you can be a good listener.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: After the sentence-initial adverbial phrase 〈Following these ways〉, a comma is needed to separate it from the main clause. According to English punctuation norms, 『,』 is added to clearly demarcate sentence components.