Writing prompt: My Favorite Place at School

Student essay:
Our school has a lot of places,and students like to hang out, such as playground, computer rooms,art room etc. The classroom is one of the best places in school,because it makes me joyful.
The classroom is not only bright but also big. And there are many desks, they make the it spacious and clear. I can always hear the pup when the students are attending class. In such an environment,we can learn by heart that I'm fond of learning in it. I like classroom learning environment like it brings to me. It makes me realise that study is useful for achievement in the classroom. I like learning books, because it not only provides helping me learn a lot of what is happening around the history, but also I feel very happy.
Although our classroom isn't gorgeous but I still love it,because classroom brings me and others laugh. It is too hard to forget this place,because it gave me a lot of memories. So of all the places in the school,the classroom is my favorite place.

Corrected essay:
Our school has a lot of places where students like to hang out, such as the playground, computer rooms, art rooms, etc. The classroom is one of the best places in school because it makes me joyful.
The classroom is not only bright but also big. And there are many desks; the classroom is spacious and clear. I can always hear the pupils when they are attending classes. In such an environment, we can learn by heart, and I'm fond of learning in it. I like the learning environment of the classroom, and I like what it brings to me. It makes me realise that studying in the classroom is useful for achievement. I like reading books because it not only helps me learn a lot about what is happening in history, but also makes me feel very happy.
 Although our classroom isn't gorgeous, I still love it because the classroom brings me and others laughter. It is too hard to forget this place because it gave me a lot of memories. So, of all the places in the school, the classroom is my favorite place.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Our school has a lot of places,and students like to hang out, such as playground, computer rooms,art room etc.
correct_sentence: Our school has a lot of places where students like to hang out, such as the playground, computer rooms, art rooms, etc.
error: ,and
correction: where
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Relative Word Error: According to English adjective clause rules, when the antecedent 〈places〉 indicates a location and the clause requires a complete adverbial structure, the relative adverb 『where』 must be used to introduce it. Therefore, the incorrect structure 〈places,and〉 is corrected to 『places where』 to form a complete adverbial clause of place; ② Punctuation Error: According to the punctuation rules for complex sentences with subordinate clauses, a comma should not be used before a relative clause to separate the antecedent from the relative word. Therefore, the extra comma is deleted, and 『where』 is used directly to establish the clause connection.
error_sentence: Our school has a lot of places,and students like to hang out, such as playground, computer rooms,art room etc.
correct_sentence: Our school has a lot of places where students like to hang out, such as the playground, computer rooms, art rooms, etc.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English definite article rules for specific nouns, when the listed item 〈playground〉 serves as a specific school facility, the definite article 『the』 must be added for specificity. Therefore, it is corrected to 『such as the playground』 to make the sentence grammatically correct.
error_sentence: Our school has a lot of places,and students like to hang out, such as playground, computer rooms,art room etc.
correct_sentence: Our school has a lot of places where students like to hang out, such as the playground, computer rooms, art rooms, etc.
error: room
correction: rooms,
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the principle of consistency in English parallel structures, 〈computer rooms〉 and 〈art room〉 as parallel components need to maintain number agreement. Therefore, the singular form 〈art room〉 is changed to the plural 『art rooms』; ② Punctuation Error: According to English expression norms, when listing multiple items, the last item and 〈etc.〉 should be separated by a space. Therefore, 〈room etc.〉 is modified to 『rooms, etc.』 to comply with grammatical norms.
error_sentence: The classroom is one of the best places in school,because it makes me joyful.

correct_sentence: The classroom is one of the best places in school because it makes me joyful.

error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules for adverbial clauses of reason, when the subordinating conjunction 〈because〉 directly introduces a clause, a comma should not precede it. Therefore, the redundant comma is deleted to maintain a direct connection between the main and subordinate clauses.
error_sentence: And there are many desks, they make the it spacious and clear.
correct_sentence: And there are many desks; the classroom is spacious and clear.
error: , they make the it
correction: ; the classroom is
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation norms for coordinate sentences, two complete independent clauses need to be connected by a semicolon or a conjunction. Therefore, the incorrect comma splice is changed to a semicolon structure 『many desks; the classroom is』; ② Sentence Structure Error: According to the principle of clear pronoun reference in English, the original sentence has confusing references for pronouns 〈they〉 and 〈it〉. It is reconstructed with a clear subject-verb structure 『the classroom is spacious and clear』, and the redundant article 〈the〉 is deleted to avoid semantic confusion.
error_sentence: I can always hear the pup when the students are attending class.
correct_sentence: I can always hear the pupils when they are attending classes.
error: pup when the students
correction: pupils when they
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary norms in an educational context, 〈pup〉 specifically refers to a young animal; to denote students, the standard term 『pupils』 should be used. Therefore, it is replaced with the accurate term to express "students"; ② Pronoun Error: According to the English principle of avoiding repetition, when 〈the students〉 is mentioned for the second time, the pronoun 『they』 is used to achieve referential coherence.
error_sentence: I can always hear the pup when the students are attending class.
correct_sentence: I can always hear the pupils when they are attending classes.
error: class
correction: classes
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to common English expressions, when 〈attending class〉 refers to regular course activities, the plural form 『classes』 should be used. Therefore, it is corrected to 『attending classes』 to conform to common expressions in an educational context.
error_sentence: In such an environment,we can learn by heart that I'm fond of learning in it.
correct_sentence: In such an environment, we can learn by heart, and I'm fond of learning in it.
error: that
correction: , and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English rules for coordinate sentences, the original sentence's use of 〈that〉 to connect two independent clauses does not conform to grammatical norms. It should be changed to 『, and』 to connect two complete clauses, forming a parallel structure. 〈that〉 in the original sentence is changed to 『, and』; ② Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation norms, a comma is needed before the coordinating conjunction 〈and〉 to separate two independent clauses. A comma is added before 〈and〉, resulting in 『, and』, to ensure correct punctuation.
error_sentence: I like classroom learning environment like it brings to me.
correct_sentence: I like the learning environment of the classroom, and I like what it brings to me.
error: classroom
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to definite article usage norms, the noun phrase 〈learning environment〉 is a specific concept, so the definite article 『the』 needs to be added for clear reference, forming 『the learning environment』.
error_sentence: I like classroom learning environment like it brings to me.
correct_sentence: I like the learning environment of the classroom, and I like what it brings to me.
error: like
correction: of the classroom, and I like what
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Order Error: According to English rules for noun modifier order, when a noun needs to be modified by another noun, a prepositional phrase is usually used instead of direct pre-modification. In the original structure 〈classroom learning environment〉, the direct stacking of two nouns cannot clearly reflect the possessive relationship. Therefore, it is adjusted to 『the learning environment of the classroom』, using the 'of' genitive structure to clearly express the specific relationship "the learning environment of the classroom"; ② Determiner Error: In the adjusted structure, the double determiner 『of the』 must be added because 'classroom' here is a specific place known to both speaker and listener. This double determination structure is the standard form for expressing specific relationships in English; ③ Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has semantic repetition and logical disconnection. After reorganizing it into a parallel structure 『I like..., and I like...』, the semantic independence of the two clauses is maintained, and a logical connection is established through the coordinating conjunction; ④ Conjunction Error: According to English norms for writing coordinate sentences, when connecting two complete independent clauses, a comma + coordinating conjunction must be used to connect the two clauses; 『and』 is added to connect the two clauses; ⑤ Relative Word Error: In the second clause, the relative pronoun 『what』 is used as the object of 'brings', introducing a noun clause, and completely preserving the original meaning "what it brings". This approach both conforms to the usage norms of relative pronouns and avoids the misuse of 'like' in the original sentence.
error_sentence: It makes me realise that study is useful for achievement in the classroom.
correct_sentence: It makes me realise that studying in the classroom is useful for achievement.
error: study
correction: studying in the classroom
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the rules for using nonfinite verbs in English, when a verb phrase needs to act as a subject, the gerund form should be used. Therefore, the original structure is adjusted to use 『studying』 as the subject, which both meets grammatical requirements and maintains semantic integrity; ② Sentence Structure Error: According to the principles of sentence component arrangement in English, the adverbial phrase of place 『in the classroom』 should be immediately adjacent to the verb phrase it modifies. By adjusting the word order, the sentence structure becomes clearer and more reasonable.
error_sentence: It makes me realise that study is useful for achievement in the classroom.
correct_sentence: It makes me realise that studying in the classroom is useful for achievement.
error: in the classroom
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the principle of conciseness in English writing, the modified sentence structure has already expressed the location information through 『of the classroom』. Therefore, the repetitive adverbial component 『in the classroom』 is deleted to avoid semantic repetition.
error_sentence: I like learning books, because it not only provides helping me learn a lot of what is happening around the history, but also I feel very happy.

correct_sentence: I like reading books because it not only helps me learn a lot about what is happening in history, but also makes me feel very happy.

error: learning books,
correction: reading books
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: Referring to common English collocation habits, 〈learning books〉 does not conform to idiomatic expression. According to the norms of the Oxford Collocations Dictionary, the standard collocation 『reading books』 should be used to correctly express the meaning of reading books.
error_sentence: I like learning books, because it not only provides helping me learn a lot of what is happening around the history, but also I feel very happy.

correct_sentence: I like reading books because it not only helps me learn a lot about what is happening in history, but also makes me feel very happy.

error: provides helping
correction: helps
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to the principle of conciseness in English expression, 〈provides helping〉 forms a semantically repetitive structure. The verb 〈provide〉 itself already contains the meaning of "to give", and using it with 〈helping〉 creates redundancy. 'provides' should be deleted, and the third-person singular form of the verb 『helps』 should be used directly, modified to 『it not only helps me』 to maintain subject-verb agreement; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: 〈helping〉 as a gerund is not grammatically correct here. According to English verb usage rules, the verb should follow the principle of subject-verb agreement. Therefore, 〈helping〉 is changed to the third-person singular form of the verb 『helps』, forming the correct structure 『it not only helps me』.
error_sentence: I like learning books, because it not only provides helping me learn a lot of what is happening around the history, but also I feel very happy.

correct_sentence: I like reading books because it not only helps me learn a lot about what is happening in history, but also makes me feel very happy.

error: of
correction: about
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The combination of the verb 〈learn〉 with the preposition 〈of〉 does not conform to English idiomatic usage. According to the Oxford Collocations Dictionary, when expressing "learning knowledge in a certain field," the fixed collocation 『learn about』 should be used to correctly convey the meaning "about what is happening in history."
error_sentence: I like learning books, because it not only provides helping me learn a lot of what is happening around the history, but also I feel very happy.

correct_sentence: I like reading books because it not only helps me learn a lot about what is happening in history, but also makes me feel very happy.

error: around the
correction: in
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Preposition Error: The prepositional phrase 〈around the〉 is inaccurately expressed. According to the conventions for describing historical events, 『in』 should be used to mean "in history" to accurately express things that happened in history; ② Determiner Error: When the noun 〈history〉 is used as a subject name, it is an uncountable noun and, according to English grammar rules, does not require an article. Therefore, the redundant 〈the〉 is deleted, and 〈history〉 is used directly to refer to the general subject of history.
error_sentence: I like learning books, because it not only provides helping me learn a lot of what is happening around the history, but also I feel very happy.

correct_sentence: I like reading books because it not only helps me learn a lot about what is happening in history, but also makes me feel very happy.

error: I
correction: makes me
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The components before and after the “not only...but also” structure are not symmetrical. According to the English principle of parallel structure, the component after 〈but also〉 should be grammatically consistent with that after 〈not only〉. 〈but also I feel happy〉 is changed to 『but also makes me feel happy』, so that 『makes』 forms a parallel verb structure with 〈helps〉; ② Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, in the "make sb do sth" structure, the personal pronoun needs to be in the objective case. Therefore, the subject 〈I〉 is changed to the objective case 『me』.
error_sentence: Although our classroom isn't gorgeous but I still love it,because classroom brings me and others laugh.
correct_sentence: Although our classroom isn't gorgeous, I still love it because the classroom brings me and others laughter.
error: but
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Conjunction Error: As a subordinating conjunction, 〈although〉 already includes a concessive meaning and, according to English grammar rules, cannot be used with the coordinating conjunction 〈but〉. 〈but〉 should be deleted, retaining 〈although〉 to introduce the adverbial clause of concession, and a comma should be used to connect to the main clause.
error_sentence: Although our classroom isn't gorgeous but I still love it,because classroom brings me and others laugh.
correct_sentence: Although our classroom isn't gorgeous, I still love it because the classroom brings me and others laughter.
error: ,because
correction: because the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: When 〈,because〉 as a subordinating conjunction introduces an adverbial clause of reason, according to English punctuation rules, a comma should not precede it. Therefore, the redundant comma before 〈,because〉 is deleted and changed to 『because』; ② Determiner Error: The noun 〈classroom〉 as a specific object requires the definite article 『the』 according to English article usage rules to express specificity, forming the standard expression 『the classroom』.
error_sentence: Although our classroom isn't gorgeous but I still love it,because classroom brings me and others laugh.
correct_sentence: Although our classroom isn't gorgeous, I still love it because the classroom brings me and others laughter.
error: laugh
correction: laughter
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: The verb 〈laugh〉 cannot directly function as an object. According to English nominalization rules, the abstract noun 『laughter』 should be used to represent the concept of "laughter," forming the standard collocation 『brings me and others laughter.』.
error_sentence: It is too hard to forget this place,because it gave me a lot of memories.
correct_sentence: It is too hard to forget this place because it gave me a lot of memories.
error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When 〈,because〉 as a subordinating conjunction introduces an adverbial clause of reason, according to English punctuation rules, a comma should not precede it. Therefore, the redundant comma before 〈,because〉 is deleted and changed to 『because』.
error_sentence: So of all the places in the school,the classroom is my favorite place.
correct_sentence: So, of all the places in the school, the classroom is my favorite place.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The parenthetical phrase 〈of all the places in the school〉, as a supplementary explanatory component, needs to be set off by commas according to English punctuation norms. Therefore, commas are added before and after the phrase to form a standard expression.