Writing prompt: We Are What We Read

Student essay:
Some people believe that reading is a critical part of learning and growth.However,others believe we learn by doing and learn best for concern experience. ..In my opinion,I think reading is the best way to learn.Reading a lot of books can open our eyes and help us understand the world more.What is more,reading is a way of increasing our vocabulary.The most important of all,everything becomes possible through reading. ..But in the other way,learning by doing is also a good way to explore our environment of people,things,places and events.However,compared with reading,it takes more time and have more bad efforts than reading.So why not spend some of your spare time reading books.You will find yourself different by reading.

Corrected essay:
Some people believe that reading is a critical part of learning and growth. However, others believe we learn by doing and learn best from concrete experience. In my opinion, I think reading is the best way to learn. Reading a lot of books can open our eyes and help us understand the world more. What is more, reading is a way of increasing our vocabulary. Most important of all, everything becomes possible through reading. But in the other way, learning by doing is also a good way to explore our environment of people, things, places and events. However, compared with reading, it takes more time and has more bad effects than reading. So why not spend some of your spare time reading books? You will find yourself different by reading.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: However,others believe we learn by doing and learn best for concern experience.
correct_sentence: However, others believe we learn by doing and learn best from concrete experience.
error: for concern
correction: from concrete
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: The context suggests the intended meaning is 'and learn best from concrete experience'; the verb phrase 〈learn best〉 should be followed by the preposition 『from』 indicating source, so 〈for〉 is changed to 『from』 to correctly express the meaning; ② Noun Error: 〈concern〉 is a verb/noun, but an adjective is needed here to modify 〈experience〉, indicating concrete experience, so 〈concern〉 is changed to 『concrete』 to fit the semantic logic.
error_sentence: ..
correct_sentence: However, others believe we learn by doing and learn best from concrete experience. In my opinion, I think reading is the best way to learn.
error: ..
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The repeated period 〈..〉 does not conform to punctuation standards, so 〈..〉 is deleted.
error_sentence: The most important of all,everything becomes possible through reading.
correct_sentence: Most important of all, everything becomes possible through reading.
error: The most
correction: Most
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The fixed phrase 『Most important of all』 means 'most importantly' and does not require the article 〈The〉, so 〈The most〉 is changed to 『Most』 to conform to English idiomatic usage.
error_sentence: ..
correct_sentence: Most important of all, everything becomes possible through reading. But in the other way, learning by doing is also a good way to explore our environment of people, things, places and events.
error: ..
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The repeated period 〈..〉 does not conform to punctuation standards, so 〈..〉 is deleted.
error_sentence: However,compared with reading,it takes more time and have more bad efforts than reading.
correct_sentence: However, compared with reading, it takes more time and has more bad effects than reading.
error: have
correction: has
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈it〉 is third-person singular and requires the third-person singular form of the verb, so 〈have〉 is changed to 『has』 to comply with subject-verb agreement rules.
error_sentence: However,compared with reading,it takes more time and have more bad efforts than reading.
correct_sentence: However, compared with reading, it takes more time and has more bad effects than reading.
error: efforts
correction: effects
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: 〈efforts〉 means 'endeavors' or 'attempts', while 'negative impacts' is needed here, so 〈efforts〉 is changed to 『effects』 to fit the contextual logic.
error_sentence: So why not spend some of your spare time reading books.
correct_sentence: So why not spend some of your spare time reading books?
error: .
correction: ?
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A suggestive interrogative sentence 'why not...' should end with a question mark, so 〈.〉 is changed to 『?』 to conform to interrogative sentence punctuation standards.