Writing prompt: The Advantages and Disadvantages of Private Cars

Student essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying cars.
With the number of private cars is increasing,not only something good but also something terrible
is happening.
On the other hand,there are some advantages.At first,it is convenient for office workers to go to conmany.They can go to work on time.Second,people who liking travling can go to someplace they want
to go by driving.Last,if driving insteads of walking,the old can not be tired to go outside.
However,there are also some disadvantages.For example,the traffic is often heavy in rush hours.
And the more and more traffic accidents are happening,many families were hurted.The air has
been polluted.So that the climate gets warmer.
In a word,everything has two ways.If you get something,you must lose something.
I only hope drivers can enjoy their lives a

Corrected essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying cars.
With the number of private cars increasing, not only something good but also something terrible is happening.
On the one hand, there are some advantages. At first, it is convenient for office workers to go to the company. They can go to work on time. Second, people who like traveling can go to someplace they want to go by driving. Last, if driving instead of walking, the old won't get tired when going outside. However, there are also some disadvantages. For example, the traffic is often heavy in rush hours.
And more and more traffic accidents are happening. Many families are hurt. The air has been polluted, so the climate gets warmer.
In a word, everything has two sides. If you get something, you must lose something.
I only hope drivers can enjoy their lives.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: With the number of private cars is increasing,not only something good but also something terrible
is happening.

correct_sentence: With the number of private cars increasing, not only something good but also something terrible is happening.

error: is
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; in the phrase 〈With the number of private cars is increasing〉, 〈is〉 is redundant, leading to an incorrect sentence structure. 『increasing』 here acts as a present participle modifying 〈cars〉, and does not require 〈is〉; therefore, 〈is〉 is deleted to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: With the number of private cars is increasing,not only something good but also something terrible
is happening.

correct_sentence: With the number of private cars increasing, not only something good but also something terrible is happening.

error: 

error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Format Error: The sentence 〈not only something good...〉 belongs to the same complete semantic unit as the preceding text and should not be interrupted by a line break; therefore, the extra line break 〈 〉 is deleted to maintain paragraph continuity and format specifications.
error_sentence: On the other hand,there are some advantages.
correct_sentence: On the one hand, there are some advantages.
error: other
correction: one
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: When expressing contrast, the phrase 『on the one hand』 should be used first; therefore, 〈other〉 is changed to 『one』 to correctly express the sentence logic.
error_sentence: At first,it is convenient for office workers to go to conmany.
correct_sentence: At first, it is convenient for office workers to go to the company.
error: conmany
correction: the company
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when referring to a specific place or thing, the definite article 『the』 is usually added before a countable noun. Here, 'company' is mentioned, requiring 『the』 for specific reference; therefore, 『the』 is added after 〈to〉 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that 'company' is intended here; therefore, 〈conmany〉 is a misspelling of 『company』 and needs to be corrected to 『company』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.
error_sentence: Second,people who liking travling can go to someplace they want
to go by driving.
correct_sentence: Second, people who like traveling can go to someplace they want to go by driving.
error: liking travling
correction: like traveling
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Other Error: The antecedent 〈people〉 is a plural noun, and the simple present tense is required here; therefore, 〈liking〉 is changed to 『like』 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that 'traveling' is intended here; therefore, 〈travling〉 is a misspelling of 『traveling』 and needs to be corrected to 『traveling』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.
error_sentence: Second,people who liking travling can go to someplace they want
to go by driving.
correct_sentence: Second, people who like traveling can go to someplace they want to go by driving.
error: 

error_sentence: Last,if driving insteads of walking,the old can not be tired to go outside.

correct_sentence: Last, if driving instead of walking, the old won't get tired when going outside.
error: insteads
correction: instead
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that 'instead of' is intended here; therefore, 〈insteads〉 is a misspelling of 『instead』 and needs to be corrected to 『instead』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.
error_sentence: Last,if driving insteads of walking,the old can not be tired to go outside.

correct_sentence: Last, if driving instead of walking, the old won't get tired when going outside.
error: can not be tired to go
correction: won't get tired when going
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning. Considering the context, it is clear that the intended meaning is 'Lastly, if driving instead of walking, the elderly will not get tired when going out'; therefore, 〈can not be tired to go〉 is changed to 『won't get tired when going』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Last,if driving insteads of walking,the old can not be tired to go outside.

correct_sentence: Last, if driving instead of walking, the old won't get tired when going outside. However, there are also some disadvantages.
error: 

error_sentence: And the more and more traffic accidents are happening,many families were hurted.
correct_sentence: And more and more traffic accidents are happening.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy: The phrase 〈more and more〉 itself already implies a general sense and does not require the article 〈the〉; therefore, 〈the〉 is deleted to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: And the more and more traffic accidents are happening,many families were hurted.
correct_sentence: And more and more traffic accidents are happening. Many families are hurt.
error: ,many families were hurted
correction: . Many families are hurt
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈And the more and more traffic accidents are happening〉 and 〈many families were hurted〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be separate sentences; therefore, 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 and 〈many〉 is changed to 『Many』; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, end-of-sentence punctuation should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence; therefore, 〈,many〉 is changed to 『. Many』 to conform to conventions; ③ Verb Tense Error: 〈were hurted〉 is an incorrect past tense structure; the past participle of 『hurt』 is the same as its base form, and the simple present tense should be used here; therefore, 〈were hurted〉 is changed to 『are hurt』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: The air has
been polluted.
correct_sentence: The air has been polluted, so the climate gets warmer.

error: 

error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Format Error: 〈been polluted〉 has a causal relationship with the following text and should not be interrupted by a line break; therefore, the extra line break 〈 〉 is deleted to maintain paragraph continuity and format specifications.
error_sentence: The air has
been polluted. So that the climate gets warmer.

correct_sentence: The air has been polluted, so the climate gets warmer.

error: .So that
correction: , so
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: 〈So that〉 is used to express purpose, while 〈So〉 is used to express a causal relationship. Since this sentence describes a causal relationship, indicating that 'the air has been polluted' is the cause of 'the climate gets warmer', using 〈So〉 to connect the two parts is more appropriate; therefore, 〈.So that〉 is changed to 『, so』 to correctly express the sentence logic.
error_sentence: In a word,everything has two ways.
correct_sentence: In a word, everything has two sides.
error: ways
correction: sides
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: 『sides』 refers to the two aspects of something, while 〈ways〉 means methods, which does not fit the context; therefore, 〈ways〉 is changed to 『sides』 to correctly express the sentence meaning.
error_sentence: I only hope drivers can enjoy their lives a
correct_sentence: I only hope drivers can enjoy their lives.
error: a
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The original sentence 〈I only hope drivers can enjoy their lives〉 is a declarative sentence and is complete; therefore, 〈a〉 is changed to 『.』 to conform to punctuation rules.