Writing prompt: My Best Friend

Student essay:
Sometimes how to make friends is not an easy task for friends. As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying'give you money to show our close friendship'.
In my opinion, this behaviour has advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, this behaviour enable student to focus on friendship, on the other hand, this behaviour can inform bad environment and make students think money is everything.
Therefore, as a student,l should how to make friends. Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, support your now and encourages you future. Taking care about your friendship by your heart, rather than money. Secondly, money is not represent your value friendship. You can dly some small presents to your friend, it is good for your friendship.
In the current society, a true friend is very important for you. Thus,you should treasure friend.

Corrected essay:
Sometimes how to make friends is not an easy task for friends. As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying, "Give you money to show our close friendship."
In my opinion, this behaviour has advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, this behaviour enables students to focus on friendship. On the other hand, this behaviour can form a bad environment and make students think money is everything.
Therefore, as a student, I should learn how to make friends. Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, supports your present and encourages your future. Take care of your friendship with your heart, rather than money. Secondly, money does not represent your valuable friendship. You can bring some small presents to your friend, and it is good for your friendship.
In the current society, a true friend is very important for you. Thus, you should treasure friends.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying'give you money to show our close friendship'.

correct_sentence: As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying, "Give you money to show our close friendship.
error: saying'give
correction: saying, "Give
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English direct quotation rules, a comma and quotation marks should be added after the reporting verb 〈saying〉 to introduce the direct speech, so 〈saying'give〉 is changed to 『saying, "Give』 to conform to the fixed structure of "reporting verb + comma + quotation mark + capitalized first letter"; ② Case Error: According to capitalization rules, the first letter of the sentence 〈give〉 should be capitalized as 『Give』 to comply with grammatical norms.
error_sentence: As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying'give you money to show our close friendship'.

correct_sentence: As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying, "Give you money to show our close friendship. "
In my opinion, this behaviour has advantages and disadvantages.
error: '.
correction: ."
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, the end-of-sentence punctuation should be placed inside the quotation marks, so 〈close friendship'.〉 is changed to 『close friendship."』 to ensure the quotation is properly closed.
error_sentence: On the one hand, this behaviour enable student to focus on friendship, on the other hand, this behaviour can inform bad environment and make students think money is everything.

correct_sentence: On the one hand, this behaviour enables students to focus on friendship.
error: enable student
correction: enables students
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈this behaviour〉 is in the third-person singular form; according to the subject-verb agreement principle, the verb 〈enable〉 needs to be changed to the singular form 『enables』 to match the singular nature of the subject; ② Noun Number Error: According to the sentence's meaning of referring to a group, the noun 〈student〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『students』 to reflect the plural meaning of "student group," conforming to contextual logic.
error_sentence: On the one hand, this behaviour enable student to focus on friendship, on the other hand, this behaviour can inform bad environment and make students think money is everything.

correct_sentence: On the one hand, this behaviour enables students to focus on friendship. On the other hand, this behaviour can form a bad environment and make students think money is everything.

error: , on
correction: . On
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The original sentence uses a comma to connect two independent clauses, violating English compound sentence rules. According to grammatical norms, 〈, on〉 needs to be changed to 『. On』, using a period to separate complete sentences and avoid a "comma splice"; ② Case Error: The first word of the sentence 〈on〉 is at the beginning of a new sentence; according to English writing conventions, the first letter needs to be capitalized, so it is corrected to 『On』.
error_sentence: On the one hand, this behaviour enable student to focus on friendship, on the other hand, this behaviour can inform bad environment and make students think money is everything.

correct_sentence: On the other hand, this behaviour can form a bad environment and make students think money is everything.

error: inform
correction: form a
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: The verb 〈inform〉 means "to notify," which is an inappropriate match with "bad environment." According to the sentence's meaning "to form a bad environment," 『form』 should be used to accurately express the action of "forming"; ② Determiner Error: The noun phrase 〈bad environment〉 is a singular countable noun; according to grammatical rules, an indefinite article needs to be added, so 〈inform bad environment〉 is changed to 『form a bad environment』 to ensure structural completeness.
error_sentence: Therefore, as a student,l should how to make friends.
correct_sentence: Therefore, as a student, I should learn how to make friends.
error: l should
correction: I should learn
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: The original phrase 〈l should〉 is semantically incomplete; based on the context "learn how to make friends," the verb 〈learn〉 and an object need to be added, changing it to 『I should learn how to make friends.』 to clarify the purpose of the action.
error_sentence: Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, support your now and encourages you future.
correct_sentence: Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, supports your present and encourages your future.
error: support your now
correction: supports your present
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-verb Agreement Error: The relative pronoun 〈who〉 refers to a singular subject; according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb needs to be in the third-person singular form, so 〈support〉 is changed to 『supports』 to maintain subject-verb agreement; ② Noun Error: The adverb 〈now〉 is usually used in spoken language or simple time adverbs, whereas a more formal noun form is needed here to express the concept of "present," so it is changed to 『present』 to conform to formal writing norms.
error_sentence: Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, support your now and encourages you future.
correct_sentence: Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, supports your present and encourages your future.
error: you
correction: your
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The possessive form is missing in 〈you future〉; it should be changed to the possessive 『your』 to modify the noun 〈future〉. According to English grammar rules, to express possession, 『your future』 is needed to correctly convey "your future."
error_sentence: Taking care about your friendship by your heart, rather than money.
correct_sentence: Take care of your friendship with your heart, rather than money.
error: Taking care about
correction: Take care of
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The original word 〈Taking〉 is a present participle, but an imperative sentence (starting with the base form of the verb) is required here, so it is changed to 『Take』 to conform to the "command/suggestion" sentence structure; ② Preposition Error: The phrasal verb 〈take care about〉 does not conform to standard English usage; the correct collocation should be 『take care of』, expressing "to look after, to care for," so 〈about〉 is changed to 『of』.
error_sentence: Taking care about your friendship by your heart, rather than money.
correct_sentence: Take care of your friendship with your heart, rather than money.
error: by
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: When expressing "to do something with your heart," the fixed English collocation is 『with your heart』 (using your heart), not 〈by your heart〉, so the preposition usage is corrected.
error_sentence: Secondly, money is not represent your value friendship.
correct_sentence: Secondly, money does not represent your valuable friendship.
error: is
correction: does
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to English expression norms, in a negative sentence, the subject 〈money〉 is singular, requiring the auxiliary verb 〈does〉 to form the negative, so 〈money is not〉 is changed to 『money does not』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Secondly, money is not represent your value friendship.
correct_sentence: Secondly, money does not represent your valuable friendship.
error: value
correction: valuable
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to English expression norms, 〈value〉 is a noun; an adjective is needed here to modify the noun 〈friendship〉, so it is changed to 『valuable friendship』 to express "precious friendship" and make the collocation appropriate.
error_sentence: You can dly some small presents to your friend, it is good for your friendship.

correct_sentence: You can bring some small presents to your friend, and it is good for your friendship.

error: dly
correction: bring
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English spelling norms, 〈dly〉 is a spelling error; based on the sentence meaning "to carry gifts," the correct verb should be 『bring』, so it is corrected to 『bring gifts』 to fit the context and express the correct meaning.
error_sentence: You can dly some small presents to your friend, it is good for your friendship.

correct_sentence: You can bring some small presents to your friend, and it is good for your friendship.

correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: A conjunction is needed to connect two complete clauses; the original sentence only uses a comma to separate them, which would lead to a "comma splice," so 『and』 is added to comply with compound sentence rules.
error_sentence: Thus,you should treasure friend.
correct_sentence: Thus, you should treasure friends.
error: friend
correction: friends
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English expression norms, 〈friend〉 is a countable noun; here it refers to the "friends" group in general, requiring the plural form 『friends』 to match the contextual logic.