Writing prompt: An Unforgettable Experience in My Summer Vacation

Student essay:
This is PE which unforgettable class,.
My basketball is very poor,an examination of basketball marks is 10 second. However,my basketball marks are 12 second. When I see the basketball I have a headache, and don't know anything. The teacher came me,tell me some skills,and say:failure is the mother of success. Don't give up and Practice to hard must have a good result and Believe in yourself.
I will never forget the teacher's words. After a long time of practice, my basketball marks not only improve but also basketball game is a good performance.
I feel very interesting

Corrected essay:
This was an unforgettable PE class.
My basketball skills were very poor, and my examination score for basketball was 10 seconds. However, my basketball score improved to 12 seconds. When I saw the basketball, I had a headache and didn't know anything. The teacher came to me, told me some skills and said, "Failure is the mother of success. Don't give up, and practicing hard must lead to good results. Believe in yourself."
I will never forget the teacher's words. After a long time of practice, my basketball skills not only improved but also my performance in basketball games became good. I found it very interesting.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: This is PE which unforgettable class,.

correct_sentence: This was an unforgettable PE class.

error: is PE which unforgettable class,
correction: was an unforgettable PE class
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically chaotic and semantically unclear; considering the context, it aims to express 'This was an unforgettable PE class', so 〈is PE which unforgettable class,〉 is changed to 『was an unforgettable PE class』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: My basketball is very poor,an examination of basketball marks is 10 second.
correct_sentence: My basketball skills were very poor, and my examination score for basketball was 10 seconds.
error: is
correction: skills were
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: Considering the context, the intended meaning is 'basketball skills', so 『skills』 is added after 〈basketball〉 to correctly express the meaning; ② Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, describing a past state requires the past tense, so 〈is〉 is changed to 『were』.
error_sentence: My basketball is very poor,an examination of basketball marks is 10 second.
correct_sentence: My basketball skills were very poor, and my examination score for basketball was 10 seconds.
error: an examination of basketball marks is 10 second
correction: and my examination score for basketball was 10 seconds
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically chaotic and semantically unclear; considering the context, it aims to express 'my examination score for basketball was 10 seconds', so 〈an examination of basketball marks is 10 second〉 is changed to 『and my examination score for basketball was 10 seconds』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: However,my basketball marks are 12 second.
correct_sentence: However, my basketball score improved to 12 seconds.
error: marks are 12 second
correction: score improved to 12 seconds
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically chaotic and semantically unclear; considering the context, it aims to express 'However, my basketball score improved to 12 seconds', so 〈marks are 12 second〉 is changed to 『score improved to 12 seconds』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: When I see the basketball I have a headache, and don't know anything.
correct_sentence: When I saw the basketball, I had a headache and didn't know anything.
error: see
correction: saw
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, so the predicate verb should be in the simple past tense; therefore, 〈see〉 is changed to 『saw』 to meet the sentence tense requirement.
error_sentence: When I see the basketball I have a headache, and don't know anything.
correct_sentence: When I saw the basketball, I had a headache and didn't know anything.
error: I have
correction: , I had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: A comma should be used here to separate the adverbial clause of time from the main clause, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈basketball〉; ② Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, so the predicate verb should be in the simple past tense; therefore, 〈have〉 is changed to 『had』 to meet the sentence tense requirement.
error_sentence: When I see the basketball I have a headache, and don't know anything.
correct_sentence: When I saw the basketball, I had a headache and didn't know anything.
error: , and do
correction: and did
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: A compound sentence usually does not require an extra comma between two verb phrases; 〈have a headache〉 and 〈don't know anything〉 are parallel actions and part of the same sentence, so the comma 〈,〉 after 〈headache〉 is deleted; ② Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, so the predicate verb should be in the simple past tense; therefore, 〈do〉 is changed to 『did』 to meet the sentence tense requirement.
error_sentence: The teacher came me,tell me some skills,and say:failure is the mother of success.
correct_sentence: The teacher came to me, told me some skills and said, "Failure is the mother of success.
correction: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The verb 〈came〉 requires the preposition 『to』 before an object to indicate the object of the action, so 『to』 is added after 〈came〉 to complete the sentence.
error_sentence: The teacher came me,tell me some skills,and say:failure is the mother of success.
correct_sentence: The teacher came to me, told me some skills and said, "Failure is the mother of success.
error: tell
correction: told
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, so the predicate verb should be in the simple past tense; therefore, 〈tell〉 is changed to 『told』 to meet the sentence tense requirement.
error_sentence: The teacher came me,tell me some skills,and say:failure is the mother of success.
correct_sentence: The teacher came to me, told me some skills and said, "Failure is the mother of success.
error: ,and say:failure
correction: and said, "Failure
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: A compound sentence usually does not require an extra comma between two verbs; 〈tell〉 and 〈say〉 are parallel actions and part of the same sentence, so the comma 〈,〉 after 〈skills〉 is deleted; ② Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, so the predicate verb should be in the simple past tense; therefore, 〈say〉 is changed to 『said』 to meet the sentence tense requirement; ③ Punctuation Error: Direct speech requires a comma and quotation marks before it, so 〈say:failure〉 is changed to 『said, "Failure』 to conform to punctuation rules.
error_sentence: Don't give up and Practice to hard must have a good result and Believe in yourself.

correct_sentence: Don't give up, and practicing hard must lead to good results.
error: and Practice to
correction: , and practicing
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the subject of a sentence is an action or behavior, the subject needs to be in the gerund form, so 〈Practice〉 is changed to the gerund 『practicing』; ② Preposition Error: 〈to〉 as a preposition is often used to indicate direction, purpose, etc., which does not fit the grammatical structure here, so 〈to〉 is deleted.
error_sentence: Don't give up and Practice to hard must have a good result and Believe in yourself.

correct_sentence: Don't give up, and practicing hard must lead to good results.
error: have a good result and
correction: lead to good results.
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: 〈have〉 does not clearly express a causal relationship, nor does it accurately describe the connection between action and result, whereas 『lead to』 can clearly indicate that 'practicing hard' is the direct cause of 'good results', so 〈have〉 is changed to 『lead to』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: Don't give up and Practice to hard must have a good result and Believe in yourself.

correct_sentence: "
I will never forget the teacher's words.
correction: "
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: Direct quotation requires closing double quotation marks; the original sentence is missing the closing double quotation marks. Add 『"』 to conform to punctuation usage rules.
error_sentence: After a long time of practice, my basketball marks not only improve but also basketball game is a good performance.

correct_sentence: After a long time of practice, my basketball skills not only improved but also my performance in basketball games became good.
error: marks
correction: skills
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: 〈marks〉 means scores, which is inconsistent with the context describing the improvement of basketball skills; the context needs to express basketball skills, so 〈marks〉 is changed to 『skills』 to meet the semantic requirement.
error_sentence: After a long time of practice, my basketball marks not only improve but also basketball game is a good performance.

correct_sentence: After a long time of practice, my basketball skills not only improved but also my performance in basketball games became good.
error: improve
correction: improved
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to contextual tense consistency, the verb should be in the past tense, so 〈improve〉 is changed to 『improved』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: After a long time of practice, my basketball marks not only improve but also basketball game is a good performance.
 I feel very interesting
correct_sentence: After a long time of practice, my basketball skills not only improved but also my performance in basketball games became good. I found it very interesting.
error: basketball game is a good performance.
I feel
correction: my performance in basketball games became good. I found it
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: 〈basketball game is a good performance. I feel〉 is logically chaotic and semantically unclear; considering the context, it aims to express 'my performance in basketball games became good. I found it very interesting', so 〈basketball game is a good performance. I feel〉 is changed to 『my performance in basketball games became good. I found it』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I feel very interesting
correct_sentence: I found it very interesting.
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The original sentence is a declarative sentence and lacks a period at the end, so 『.』 is added after 〈interesting〉 to conform to punctuation usage rules.