Writing prompt: Stay at Home Alone

Student essay:
Everyone stay at home was unforgettable
my first stay at home was forgotten on that day they left my mother tells me to shut the door but I was so agitated. And i want to left them soonafter my dream was cometure they was went away on trip
i play computer games until mindnight without dinnr and i got up late and my i con not hint in homework
last my life was mess i was so said
know i realese stay at home along was not so perfect
Through this experience I understand we should learn to self management

Corrected essay:
Everyone staying at home was unforgettable.
My first stay at home was on that day they left. My mother told me to shut the door, but I was so agitated. And I wanted to leave them. Soon after, my dream came true—they went away on a trip.
I played computer games until midnight without dinner and I got up late. And I could not focus on my homework.
At last, my life was a mess and I was so sad.
Now I realize staying at home alone is not so perfect.
Through this experience, I understand we should learn self-management.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Everyone stay at home was unforgettable
my first stay at home was forgotten on that day they left my mother tells me to shut the door
correct_sentence: Everyone staying at home was unforgettable.

error: stay
correction: staying
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: 〈stay〉 in the original sentence acts as a subject complement, requiring the gerund form, therefore 〈stay〉 is modified to 『staying』 to comply with the grammatical rules for nonfinite verbs as subject complements.
error_sentence: Everyone stay at home was unforgettable
my first stay at home was forgotten on that day they left my mother tells me to shut the door
correct_sentence: Everyone staying at home was unforgettable.
 My first stay at home was on that day they left.
error: 
my
correction: .
My
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈Everyone staying at home was unforgettable〉 and 〈my first stay at home was forgotten on that day they left my mother tells me to shut the door〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures, and can be independent sentences, therefore a 『.』 needs to be added after 〈unforgettable〉.
error_sentence: Everyone stay at home was unforgettable
my first stay at home was forgotten on that day they left my mother tells me to shut the door
correct_sentence: My first stay at home was on that day they left.
error: forgotten
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈forgotten〉 contradicts the subsequent logic and is redundant; deleting it will not affect the meaning, therefore the word is deleted to simplify the sentence.
error_sentence: Everyone stay at home was unforgettable
my first stay at home was forgotten on that day they left my mother tells me to shut the door
correct_sentence: My first stay at home was on that day they left. My mother told me to shut the door, but I was so agitated.
error: my mother tells
correction: . My mother told
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈My first stay at home was on that day they left〉 and 〈My mother told me to shut the door〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures, and can be independent sentences, therefore a 『.』 needs to be added after 〈left〉; ② Verb Tense Error: Judging from the context, this recalls a past event and requires the past tense, therefore 〈tells〉 is changed to 『told』.
error_sentence: Everyone stay at home was unforgettable
my first stay at home was forgotten on that day they left my mother tells me to shut the door but I was so agitated.
correct_sentence: My mother told me to shut the door, but I was so agitated.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: A comma 『,』 needs to be added before 〈but I was so agitated〉 to correctly separate the main clause and the subordinate clause, making the sentence structure clearer.
error_sentence: And i want to left them soonafter my dream was cometure they was went away on trip
i play computer games until mindnight without dinnr and i got up late
correct_sentence: And I wanted to leave them. Soon after, my dream came true—they went away on a trip.

error: i want to left them soonafter
correction: I wanted to leave them. Soon after,
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, therefore 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention; ② Verb Tense Error: Judging from the context, this refers to a past wish and requires the past tense; 〈want〉 needs to be changed to 『wanted』; ③ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The infinitive structure is “to + base form of the verb”, therefore 〈to left〉 is modified to 『to leave』; ④ Punctuation Error: 〈I wanted to leave them〉 is a sentence with a complete subject-verb-object structure, after which a 『.』 needs to be added to separate sentences; ⑤ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈soonafter〉 needs to be modified to 『Soon after』; ⑥ Punctuation Error: 『Soon after』 needs to be separated from the following content with a comma.
error_sentence: And i want to left them soonafter my dream was cometure they was went away on trip
i play computer games until mindnight without dinnr and i got up late
correct_sentence: Soon after, my dream came true—they went away on a trip.

error: was cometure they was
correction: came true—they
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: Here, the intention is to express “dream come true”, 〈was cometure〉 should be changed to 『came true』; ② Auxiliary Error: In the original sentence 〈they was went away on a trip.〉, the auxiliary verb 〈was〉 is redundant and needs to be deleted to make the sentence expression clear.
error_sentence: And i want to left them soonafter my dream was cometure they was went away on trip
i play computer games until mindnight without dinnr and i got up late
correct_sentence: Soon after, my dream came true—they went away on a trip.
 I played computer games until midnight without dinner and I got up late.
error: trip
i play
correction: a trip.
I played
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the indefinite article 『a』 needs to be added before the singular countable noun 〈trip〉; ② Punctuation Error: 〈they went away on a trip〉 is a structurally complete sentence, after which a period 『.』 needs to be added; ③ Verb Tense Error: Judging from the context, this indicates a past event and requires the past tense, therefore 〈play〉 is modified to 『played』.
error_sentence: And i want to left them soonafter my dream was cometure they was went away on trip
i play computer games until mindnight without dinnr and i got up late
correct_sentence: I played computer games until midnight without dinner and I got up late.
error: mindnight without dinnr and i
correction: midnight without dinner and I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express “midnight”, therefore 〈mindnight〉 is a misspelling of 『midnight』, and needs to be changed to 『midnight』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express “dinner”, therefore 〈dinnr〉 is a misspelling of 『dinner』, and needs to be changed to 『dinner』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, therefore 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: and my i con not hint in homework
last my life was mess i was so said

correct_sentence: I played computer games until midnight without dinner and I got up late. And I could not focus on my homework.
 At last, my life was a mess and I was so sad.

error: and my i con not hint in homework
last
correction: . And I could not focus on my homework.
At last,
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence 〈and my i con not hint in homework last〉 does not conform to English sentence structure norms and its meaning is unclear; judging from the context, it should be modified to 『. And I could not focus on my homework. At last,』.
error_sentence: and my i con not hint in homework
last my life was mess i was so said

correct_sentence: At last, my life was a mess and I was so sad.

error: mess i
correction: a mess and I
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammatical rules, the article 『a』 needs to be added before the singular countable noun 〈mess〉; ② Conjunction Error: There are two independent clauses in the original sentence, therefore the conjunction 『and』 needs to be added after 〈mess〉 to connect parallel elements; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, therefore 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: and my i con not hint in homework
last my life was mess i was so said
 know i realese stay at home along was not so perfect
Through this experience I understand we should learn to self management
correct_sentence: At last, my life was a mess and I was so sad.
 Now I realize staying at home alone is not so perfect.

error: said
know i realese stay
correction: sad.
Now I realize staying
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express “sad”, therefore 〈said〉 is a misspelling of 『sad』, and needs to be changed to 『sad』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express “now”, therefore 〈know〉 is a misspelling of 『Now』, and needs to be changed to 『Now』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ③ Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express “realize”, therefore 〈realese〉 is a misspelling of 『realize』, and needs to be changed to 『realize』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ④ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: Judging from the context, 〈stay〉 here acts as the subject and needs to be in the gerund form, therefore it is modified to 『staying』.
error_sentence: know i realese stay at home along was not so perfect
Through this experience I understand we should learn to self management
correct_sentence: Now I realize staying at home alone is not so perfect.

error: along was
correction: alone is
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express “alone”, therefore 〈along〉 is a misspelling of 『alone』, and needs to be changed to 『alone』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the intention here is to express the present state, 〈was〉 needs to be changed to 『is』 to meet the tense requirement for describing the current situation.
error_sentence: know i realese stay at home along was not so perfect
Through this experience I understand we should learn to self management
correct_sentence: Now I realize staying at home alone is not so perfect.

correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: The original sentence 〈Now I realize staying at home alone is not so perfect〉 is a structurally complete sentence, and a period 『.』 needs to be added at the end to mark the end of the sentence.
error_sentence: know i realese stay at home along was not so perfect
Through this experience I understand we should learn to self management
correct_sentence: Through this experience, I understand we should learn self-management.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, a comma 『,』 needs to be added after 〈Through this experience〉 to separate it from the following content.
error_sentence: know i realese stay at home along was not so perfect
Through this experience I understand we should learn to self management
correct_sentence: Through this experience, I understand we should learn self-management.
error: to self management
correction: self-management.
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: The verb 〈learn〉 here is a transitive verb and is not followed by the preposition 〈to〉; deleting 〈to〉 makes the expression more standard; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express “self-management”, therefore 〈self management〉 is a misspelling of 『self-management』, and needs to be changed to 『self-management』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.