Writing prompt: Wisdom Is the Most Important

Student essay:
Among wisdom, money, truth, right and beauty, I believe that wisdom is the most important one.
There must be something that can't be bought with money, but I can earn it by my wisdom. With my wisdom, I can acquire how the truth comes from. If I'm stupid, I may even don't know how to use my right. And beauty, it's really not useful. People will become old and their looking will fade, but wisdom will not decrease. Sometimes, the older the person is, the wiser he is.
Someone may say:"The most innocent one is the happiest." I don't think so. I know why the world has day and night, why there are seasons, and how human became the most intelligent creature. I'm happy because of my wisdom.
All in all, it is wisdom that will be with us for whole life.

Corrected essay:
Among wisdom, money, truth, right and beauty, I believe that wisdom is the most important one.
There must be something that can't be bought with money, but I can earn it with my wisdom. With my wisdom, I can understand where the truth comes from. If I'm stupid, I may not even know how to use my rights. And beauty is really not useful. People will become old and their looks will fade, but wisdom will not decrease. Sometimes, the older a person is, the wiser they are.
Someone may say, "The most innocent one is the happiest." I don't think so. I know why the world has day and night, why there are seasons, and how humans became the most intelligent creatures. I'm happy because of my wisdom.
All in all, it is wisdom that will be with us for our whole life.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: There must be something that can't be bought with money, but I can earn it by my wisdom.
correct_sentence: There must be something that can't be bought with money, but I can earn it with my wisdom.
error: by
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: Based on the sentence's meaning, it intends to express acquiring something by means of wisdom; the preposition should be 『with』 instead of 〈by〉.
error_sentence: With my wisdom, I can acquire how the truth comes from.
correct_sentence: With my wisdom, I can understand where the truth comes from.
error: acquire how
correction: understand where
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'understanding the origin of truth'; 『understand』 should be used instead of 〈acquire〉, as the latter means 'to obtain something tangible'; ② Relative Word Error: 〈how〉 is used to describe a manner, while the origin of truth is a concept of place; 『where』 should be used.
error_sentence: If I'm stupid, I may even don't know how to use my right.
correct_sentence: If I'm stupid, I may not even know how to use my rights.
error: even don't
correction: not even
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Word Order Error: The word order of the adverb 〈even〉 and the negative form 〈not〉 is incorrect; the correct expression is 『not even』 to conform to English usage. Therefore, 〈even don't〉 is changed to 『not even』; ② Auxiliary Error: According to the original sentence structure, the sentence already has the modal verb 〈may〉, so the auxiliary verb 'do' in 〈don't〉 is unnecessary; 〈don't〉 should be split into 'do' and 'not', and the redundant auxiliary 'do' should be deleted, ultimately changing 〈may even don't〉 to 『may not even』.
error_sentence: If I'm stupid, I may even don't know how to use my right.
correct_sentence: If I'm stupid, I may not even know how to use my rights.
error: right
correction: rights
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: Based on the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'multiple rights' rather than a single right. Therefore, the singular form 〈right〉 is changed to the plural form 『rights』.
error_sentence: And beauty, it's really not useful.
correct_sentence: And beauty is really not useful.
error: , it's
correction: is
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence uses a comma to join two independent clauses, resulting in an incomplete sentence structure; the correction uses 『beauty is』 as the subject-verb structure to form a complete simple sentence.
error_sentence: People will become old and their looking will fade, but wisdom will not decrease.
correct_sentence: People will become old and their looks will fade, but wisdom will not decrease.
error: looking
correction: looks
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: Based on the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'appearance'; therefore, 〈looking〉 is changed to 『looks』.
error_sentence: Sometimes, the older the person is, the wiser he is.

correct_sentence: Sometimes, the older a person is, the wiser they are.

error: the
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when referring to a generic type of person, the indefinite article 『a person』 should be used instead of the definite article 〈the person〉.
error_sentence: Sometimes, the older the person is, the wiser he is.

correct_sentence: Sometimes, the older a person is, the wiser they are.

error: he is
correction: they are
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The pronoun 〈he〉 has gender limitations in modern English and needs to be changed to the gender-neutral 『they』 for greater inclusivity; additionally, based on the principle of subject-verb agreement, 〈is〉 needs to be changed to 『are』 to match the plural pronoun.
error_sentence: Someone may say:"The most innocent one is the happiest."
correct_sentence: Someone may say, "The most innocent one is the happiest."
error: say:"The
correction: say, "The
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, a comma should be used to separate the main clause from direct speech, not a colon.
error_sentence: I know why the world has day and night, why there are seasons, and how human became the most intelligent creature.
correct_sentence: I know why the world has day and night, why there are seasons, and how humans became the most intelligent creatures.
error: human
correction: humans
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: Based on the sentence's meaning, it intends to refer to humanity as a whole, which should be plural; therefore, 〈human〉 is changed to 『humans』.
error_sentence: I know why the world has day and night, why there are seasons, and how human became the most intelligent creature.
correct_sentence: I know why the world has day and night, why there are seasons, and how humans became the most intelligent creatures.
error: creature
correction: creatures
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: Based on the sentence's meaning, it intends to refer to multiple types of beings, which should be plural; therefore, 〈creature〉 is changed to 『creatures』.
error_sentence: All in all, it is wisdom that will be with us for whole life.
correct_sentence: All in all, it is wisdom that will be with us for our whole life.
correction: our
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Pronoun Error: Here, 〈whole life〉 requires a possessive determiner to clarify possession, indicating our entire life; 『our』 needs to be added to make the sentence structure complete.