Writing prompt: When I Have a Different Opinion

Student essay:
Each one leaves, there are lines of its own. Each person has the motto of his own. We should face in a calm mood, when we face the problem that other people's opinion is different from yours. If you don't use appropriate methods to solve the problem, it will be more and more serious.
In my opinion, we should respect the opinion that the most people decided. This doesn't mean that we don't voice own opinion all the time. I consider that the minority is subordinate to the majority is the rule when our opinions are different in all ages. But we have the right to comment. The other people can refer to the opinion.
I consider that if we do like this, we will get along with other.

Corrected essay:
Each one leaves, and there are lines of their own. Each person has the motto of his own. We should face differences in opinion with a calm mood when we encounter problems where other people's opinions differ from ours. If you don't use appropriate methods to solve the problem, it will be more and more serious.
In my opinion, we should respect the opinion that most people decide on. This doesn't mean that we don't voice our own opinion all the time. I consider that the minority being subordinate to the majority is the rule when our opinions differ throughout all ages. But we have the right to comment, and other people can refer to our opinion.
I consider that if we do like this, we will get along with others.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Each one leaves, there are lines of its own.
correct_sentence: Each one leaves, and there are lines of their own.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: A conjunction is missing between the two independent clauses 〈Each one leaves〉 and 〈there are lines of its own〉; adding 『and』 avoids a comma splice and conforms to English compound sentence structure rules.
error_sentence: Each one leaves, there are lines of its own.
correct_sentence: Each one leaves, and there are lines of their own.
error: its
correction: their
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to pronoun number agreement rules, although 〈Each one〉 in the preceding text is singular, 〈lines〉 in the following text implies a plural concept, so the singular possessive pronoun 〈its〉 is changed to the plural 『their』.
error_sentence: We should face in a calm mood, when we face the problem that other people's opinion is different from yours.
correct_sentence: We should face differences in opinion with a calm mood when we encounter problems where other people's opinions differ from ours.
error: in
correction: differences in opinion with
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression conventions, 〈in〉 in 〈face in a calm mood〉 is misused; 『with a calm mood』 better fits the expression "with a calm mood", so 〈in〉 is changed to 『with』; ② Noun Error: According to the sentence meaning, 『differences in opinion』 needs to be added to clarify the specific content being faced, i.e., differences in opinion.
error_sentence: We should face in a calm mood, when we face the problem that other people's opinion is different from yours.
correct_sentence: We should face differences in opinion with a calm mood when we encounter problems where other people's opinions differ from ours.
error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, a comma should not be used to separate an adverbial clause of time from the main clause; the comma 〈,〉 in 〈in a calm mood, when〉 in the original sentence is misplaced and needs to be deleted to make the sentence structure smoother and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: We should face in a calm mood, when we face the problem that other people's opinion is different from yours.
correct_sentence: We should face differences in opinion with a calm mood when we encounter problems where other people's opinions differ from ours.
error: face the problem that
correction: encounter problems where
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: For precision of meaning, 〈encounter〉 is more appropriate than 〈face〉 for the semantics of "encountering problems"; the use of 〈face〉 in the original sentence is not accurate enough and needs to be changed to 『encounter』; ② Relative Word Error: According to the sentence structure, 〈that〉 is used incorrectly as a guide; changing it to the relative adverb 『where』 correctly guides the adjective clause modifying 〈problems〉, making the sentence structure clearer and more accurate, so 〈that〉 is changed to 『where』.
error_sentence: We should face in a calm mood, when we face the problem that other people's opinion is different from yours.
correct_sentence: We should face differences in opinion with a calm mood when we encounter problems where other people's opinions differ from ours.
error: opinion is different from yours
correction: opinions differ from ours
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: In English, the subject and predicate verb must agree in number. In the original sentence, 〈opinion〉 is singular, while the predicate 〈differ〉 is plural, so 〈opinion〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『opinions』 to agree with 〈differ〉; ② Pronoun Error: According to pronoun agreement rules, the preceding subject is 〈we〉, so 『ours』 should be used to replace 〈yours〉 to maintain consistency between the pronoun and the subject.
error_sentence: In my opinion, we should respect the opinion that the most people decided.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, we should respect the opinion that most people decide on.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈most people〉 means "most people" and is a generic concept that does not require the definite article 〈the〉. The 〈the〉 in 〈the most people〉 in the original sentence is a redundant determiner and needs to be deleted to conform to the idiomatic expression 『most people』.
error_sentence: In my opinion, we should respect the opinion that the most people decided.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, we should respect the opinion that most people decide on.
error: decided
correction: decide on
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, the simple present tense should be used when a clause expresses a general truth or a regular situation; the past tense 〈decided〉 in the original sentence is incorrect and should be changed to the simple present tense 『decide』; ② Verb Choice Error: According to English expression conventions, when 〈decide〉 is used as an intransitive verb followed by an object, it needs to be paired with the preposition 〈on〉 to form the fixed phrase 〈decide on sth.〉; the original sentence lacks a preposition, so 〈decided〉 is modified to 『decide on』 to complete the collocation and make the meaning clearer.
error_sentence: This doesn't mean that we don't voice own opinion all the time.
correct_sentence: This doesn't mean that we don't voice our own opinion all the time.
correction: our
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English possessive expression rules, a possessive pronoun needs to be added before 〈own opinion〉 to clarify possession; the original sentence is missing a possessive pronoun, so 『our』 is added, making the sentence express "our own opinion," conforming to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: I consider that the minority is subordinate to the majority is the rule when our opinions are different in all ages.
correct_sentence: I consider that the minority being subordinate to the majority is the rule when our opinions differ throughout all ages.
error: is
correction: being
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, a simple sentence cannot have two predicates (when not connected by a conjunction); in the original phrase 〈the minority is subordinate to the majority〉, there are two instances of 〈is〉, constituting a double predicate error. Changing 〈is subordinate〉 to 『being subordinate』, using a nonfinite verb form (gerund phrase) as a subject complement, avoids the double predicate error and conforms to English grammar standards.
error_sentence: I consider that the minority is subordinate to the majority is the rule when our opinions are different in all ages.
correct_sentence: I consider that the minority being subordinate to the majority is the rule when our opinions differ throughout all ages.
error: are different in
correction: differ throughout
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to English expression conventions, a verb is needed here to directly express the action; the original phrase 〈are different〉 is an adjectival structure, which is a confusion of parts of speech, and should be changed to the verb 『differ』; ② Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, when expressing the time frame "throughout all ages," the use of 〈in〉 is incorrect; 『throughout』 is more appropriate for the context, so 〈in〉 is changed to 『throughout』.
error_sentence: But we have the right to comment. The other people can refer to the opinion.

correct_sentence: But we have the right to comment, and other people can refer to our opinion.

error: . The
correction: , and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, a conjunction is needed to connect the two independent clauses 〈But we have the right to comment〉 and 〈The other people can refer to the opinion〉; the original sentence's use of a period to separate them is incorrect; the period is changed to a comma and 『and』 is added to form a compound sentence, maintaining coherence.
error_sentence: The other people can refer to the opinion.

correct_sentence: But we have the right to comment, and other people can refer to our opinion.

error: the
correction: our
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to the sentence meaning, 〈the opinion〉 lacks a clear referent; to create logical coherence with the preceding 〈we〉, 〈the〉 needs to be changed to 『our』, so that the opinion referred to belongs to "us," conforming to contextual logic.
error_sentence: I consider that if we do like this, we will get along with other.
correct_sentence: I consider that if we do like this, we will get along with others.
error: other
correction: others
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, when 〈other〉 is used as a pronoun meaning "other people," it needs to be in the plural form to match the plural context, so 〈other〉 is changed to 『others』 to conform to the number rules for indefinite pronouns.