Writing prompt: Housework

Student essay:
Now lots of parents don't want their children to do housework,because they think that doing housework is not better than doing homework. But I don't think so,I think as a student we should do some housework for our parents. Let us talk about the advantages about doing housework.
First though doing homework can make us clever doing housework can make our body fit and healthy it is also very necessary for us isn't it? Besides,expect learning how to study well it's also sensible to know how to make our life better how to make ours feel happy. What is more. Doing housework can improve our independent ability. If parents leave you alone you will take care of yourself very well and your parents shouldn't worry about you too.It can ease the burden on your parents.
Put off your pencil and enjoy the happiness form housework now.You will love it.

Corrected essay:
Now lots of parents don't want their children to do housework, because they think that doing housework is not better than doing homework. But I don't think so. I think as a student we should do some housework for our parents. Let us talk about the advantages of doing housework.
First doing homework can make us clever, and doing housework can make our body fit and healthy. It is also very necessary for us, isn't it? Besides, in addition to learning how to study well, it's also sensible to know how to make our life better and how to make ourselves feel happy. What is more, doing housework can improve our independence ability. If your parents leave you alone, you will take good care of yourself and your parents won't worry about you too. It can ease the burden on your parents.
Put down your pencil and enjoy the happiness from housework now. You will love it.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: But I don't think so,I think as a student we should do some housework for our parents.
correct_sentence: But I don't think so.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈But I don't think so〉 and 〈I think as a student we should do some housework for our parents〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: Let us talk about the advantages about doing housework.

correct_sentence: Let us talk about the advantages of doing housework.

error: about
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The preposition 〈about〉 in the phrase 〈advantages about〉 is used incorrectly; when expressing advantages, 『of』 should be used to indicate possession, so 〈about〉 is changed to 『advantages of』.
error_sentence: First though doing homework can make us clever doing housework can make our body fit and healthy it is also very necessary for us isn't it?
correct_sentence: First doing homework can make us clever, and doing housework can make our body fit and healthy.
error: though
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈though〉 creates a logical contradiction here; 〈First〉 has already been used to indicate enumeration, and a concessive conjunction is not needed afterwards, so 〈though〉 is deleted to simplify the expression and maintain coherence.
error_sentence: First though doing homework can make us clever doing housework can make our body fit and healthy it is also very necessary for us isn't it?
correct_sentence: First doing homework can make us clever, and doing housework can make our body fit and healthy.
correction: , and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: A conjunction is missing between the two coordinate clauses; 『and』 needs to be added for connection, so 『, and』 is added after 〈clever〉 to complete the sentence structure and maintain logical coherence.
error_sentence: First though doing homework can make us clever doing housework can make our body fit and healthy it is also very necessary for us isn't it?
correct_sentence: First doing homework can make us clever, and doing housework can make our body fit and healthy. It is also very necessary for us, isn't it?
error: it
correction: . It
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 『First doing homework can make us clever, and doing housework can make our body fit and healthy』 and 〈it is also very necessary for us isn't it〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, so 〈it〉 is changed to 『. It』 to ensure grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: First though doing homework can make us clever doing housework can make our body fit and healthy it is also very necessary for us isn't it?
correct_sentence: It is also very necessary for us, isn't it?
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a tag question 〈isn't it〉 needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma 『,』, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈us〉 to ensure grammatical correctness and enhance readability.
error_sentence: Besides,expect learning how to study
correct_sentence: Besides, in addition to learning how to study well, it's also sensible to know how to make our life better and how to make ourselves feel happy.
error: expect
correction: in addition to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: 〈expect〉 is a verb; here, the prepositional phrase 『in addition to』 is needed to mean 'besides', so 〈expect〉 is changed to 『in addition to』 to fit the progressive relationship in the context.
error_sentence: well it's also sensible to know how to make our life better how to make ours feel happy.
correct_sentence: Besides, in addition to learning how to study well, it's also sensible to know how to make our life better and how to make ourselves feel happy.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The prepositional phrase 〈in addition to learning how to study well〉 needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma 『,』, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈well〉 to enhance the structural clarity of the sentence.
error_sentence: it's also sensible to know how to make our life better how to make ours feel happy.
correct_sentence: Besides, in addition to learning how to study well, it's also sensible to know how to make our life better and how to make ourselves feel happy.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: In the sentence 〈how to make our life better how to make ours feel happy〉, a conjunction is missing between the two actions, so 『and』 is added after 〈better〉 to connect the actions and ensure sentence coherence.
error_sentence: it's also sensible to know how to make our life better how to make ours feel happy.
correct_sentence: Besides, in addition to learning how to study well, it's also sensible to know how to make our life better and how to make ourselves feel happy.
error: ours
correction: ourselves
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: In 〈make ours feel happy〉, the reflexive pronoun 『ourselves』 is needed to refer to the subject 'we', meaning 'to make ourselves feel happy', so 〈ours〉 is changed to 『ourselves』 to correctly refer to the subject and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: What is more. Doing housework can improve our independent ability.
correct_sentence: What is more, doing housework can improve our independence ability.
error: . Doing
correction: , doing
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The transitional phrase 〈What is more〉 should be followed by a comma 『,』, not a period, as it introduces a supplementary explanation within the same sentence, so 〈. Doing〉 is changed to 『, doing』 to ensure coherence.
error_sentence: Doing housework can improve our independent ability.
correct_sentence: What is more, doing housework can improve our independence ability.
error: independent
correction: independence
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: 〈independent〉 is an adjective; here, the noun 『independence』 is needed to modify 'ability', meaning 'independence ability', so 〈independent〉 is changed to 『independence』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: If parents leave you alone you will take care of yourself very well and your parents shouldn't worry about you too.
correct_sentence: If your parents leave you alone, you will take good care of yourself and your parents won't worry about you too.
correction: your
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The possessive determiner 『your』 is missing before 〈parents〉, leading to unclear reference, so 『your』 is added before 〈parents〉 to create consistent reference with the later 〈your parents〉, thereby enhancing the sentence's logicality.
error_sentence: If parents leave you alone you will take care of yourself very well and your parents shouldn't worry about you too.
correct_sentence: If your parents leave you alone, you will take good care of yourself and your parents won't worry about you too.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The conditional adverbial clause 『If your parents leave you alone』 needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma 『,』, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈alone〉 to ensure clear sentence structure.
error_sentence: If parents leave you alone you will take care of yourself very well and your parents shouldn't worry about you too.
correct_sentence: If your parents leave you alone, you will take good care of yourself and your parents won't worry about you too.
correction: good
error_type: Adjective Error
error_description: Adjective Error: 〈take care〉 needs to be modified by an adverb, but the correct idiomatic expression here is 『take good care of』, meaning 'to take proper care of'.
error_sentence: If parents leave you alone you will take care of yourself very well and your parents shouldn't worry about you too.
correct_sentence: If your parents leave you alone, you will take good care of yourself and your parents won't worry about you too.
error: very well
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈take care〉 already includes the meaning of 'to take proper care of', so deleting the redundant 〈very well〉 makes the expression more concise.
error_sentence: If parents leave you alone you will take care of yourself very well and your parents shouldn't worry about you too.
correct_sentence: If your parents leave you alone, you will take good care of yourself and your parents won't worry about you too.
error: should
correction: wo
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: 〈shouldn't worry〉 means 'should not worry', but according to the context, the future tense 『won't worry』 is needed to express 'will not worry'.
error_sentence: Put off your pencil and enjoy the happiness form housework now.
correct_sentence: Put down your pencil and enjoy the happiness from housework now.
error: off
correction: down
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: 〈put off〉 means 'to postpone', while here 『put down』 is needed to mean 'to put down (the pencil)', so the preposition 〈off〉 is changed to 『down』 to express the correct meaning of the action.
error_sentence: Put off your pencil and enjoy the happiness form housework now.
correct_sentence: Put down your pencil and enjoy the happiness from housework now.
error: form
correction: from
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express 'from', so 〈form〉 is a misspelling of 『from』; 〈form〉 needs to be changed to 『from』 to make the sentence coherent.