Writing prompt: Our Plans in New Year

Student essay:
New Year's Day is coming.In my family, everyone has a New Year's plan.
My father decides to find a new job.To make more money for our family.
My mother will work hard.And look after our family well.
My brother and my sister will study hard and get good reaults,and go to a good university.
And i will woek hard on my study. Especially math, I need to improve in my Math.
I often get up late,and stay up late.I will break this habits.i will get earlier and goto bed earlier than before.
i decide to do more sprots to stay healthy.i plan to go swimming every weekends.and i will also eat healthy food to keep healthy.Such as rice , noodles,chicken suop,feef,fruit and vegetable.
This is our New Year's plan.i hope we will have a good tome.

Corrected essay:
New Year's Day is coming. In my family, everyone has a New Year's plan.
My father decides to find a new job to make more money for our family.
My mother will work hard and look after our family well.
My brother and my sister will study hard, get good results, and go to a good university.
And I will work hard on my studies, especially in math, I need to improve my math.
I often get up late, and stay up late. I will break these habits. I will get up earlier and go to bed earlier than before.
I decide to do more sports to stay healthy. I plan to go swimming every weekend. And I will also eat healthy food to keep healthy, such as rice, noodles, chicken soup, beef, fruit and vegetables.
This is our New Year's plan. I hope we will have a good time.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My father decides to find a new job. To make more money for our family.

correct_sentence: My father decides to find a new job to make more money for our family.

error: .To
correction: to
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence 〈To make more money for our family〉 is structurally incomplete as an independent sentence; 〈To make〉 as an adverbial of purpose should directly connect to the preceding sentence to maintain semantic integrity, thus 〈.To〉 is changed to 『to』 to make the sentence structure complete and logically coherent.
error_sentence: My mother will work hard. And look after our family well.

correct_sentence: My mother will work hard and look after our family well.

error: .And
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The original sentence 〈And look after our family well〉 is structurally incomplete as an independent sentence; the predicates 〈work hard〉 and 〈look after〉 should be parallel components, thus 〈.And〉 is changed to 『and』 to make the sentence structure complete and logically coherent.
error_sentence: My brother and my sister will study hard and get good reaults,and go to a good university.

correct_sentence: My brother and my sister will study hard, get good results, and go to a good university.

error: and
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, there are three parallel verb phrases 〈study hard〉, 〈get good results〉, and 〈go to university〉 in the text, and a comma is needed to separate the first two; therefore, 〈and〉 is replaced with 『,』 to conform to English parallel structure conventions.
error_sentence: My brother and my sister will study hard and get good reaults,and go to a good university.

correct_sentence: My brother and my sister will study hard, get good results, and go to a good university.

error: reaults
correction: results
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'results', thus 〈reaults〉 is a misspelling of 『results』; it needs to be changed from 〈reaults〉 to 『results』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: And i will woek hard on my study.
correct_sentence: And I will work hard on my studies, especially in math, I need to improve my math.

error: i will woek
correction: I will work
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of its position at the beginning or in the middle, thus 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'work hard', thus 〈woek〉 is a misspelling of 『work』; it needs to be changed from 〈woek〉 to 『work』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: And i will woek hard on my study. Especially math, I need to improve in my Math.

correct_sentence: And I will work hard on my studies, especially in math, I need to improve my math.

error: study. Especially
correction: studies, especially in
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: 〈study〉 refers to a specific act of learning or research; 『studies』 (plural form) refers to multiple research projects or courses, thus 〈study〉 is changed to 『studies』 to fit the context; ② Punctuation Error: Using a period to separate 〈study〉 and 〈Especially〉 causes a sentence fragment; 〈Especially〉 should connect to the main clause to maintain sentence integrity, thus 〈study. Especially〉 is changed to 『studies, especially』; ③ Preposition Error: When talking about a subject or field, 『in』 is usually used to indicate that field or subject, thus 『in』 is added before 〈math〉.
error_sentence: Especially math, I need to improve in my Math.

correct_sentence: And I will work hard on my studies, especially in math, I need to improve my math.

error: in my Math
correction: my math
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy: 〈improve〉 is a transitive verb and is directly followed by the object 〈my Math〉, thus 〈in〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I will break this habits.i will get earlier and goto bed earlier than before.

correct_sentence: I will break these habits. I will get up earlier and go to bed earlier than before.

error: this habits.i
correction: these habits. I
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The plural noun 〈habits〉 requires the plural determiner 『these』, thus 〈this〉 is changed to 『these』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Space Error: A space is required after the period here, so a space is added after 〈habits.〉; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of its position at the beginning or in the middle, thus 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: I will break this habits.i will get earlier and goto bed earlier than before.

correct_sentence: I will get up earlier and go to bed earlier than before.

correction: up
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adverb Error: The verb phrase 〈get earlier〉 is semantically incomplete; 『up』 needs to be added to form the fixed phrase 『get up』 meaning 'to rise from bed', thus 『up』 is added after 〈get〉 to clarify the action.
error_sentence: I will break this habits.i will get earlier and goto bed earlier than before.

correct_sentence: I will get up earlier and go to bed earlier than before.

error: goto
correction: go to
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, words must be separated by spaces; in this sentence, 〈go〉 and 〈to〉 are two separate words and need to be separated by a space, thus 〈goto〉 is changed to 『go to』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: i decide to do more sprots to stay healthy.i plan to go swimming every
correct_sentence: I decide to do more sports to stay healthy.
error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of its position at the beginning or in the middle, thus 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: i decide to do more sprots to stay healthy.i plan to go swimming every
correct_sentence: I decide to do more sports to stay healthy.
error: sprots
correction: sports
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'sports', thus 〈sprots〉 is a misspelling of 『sports』; it needs to be changed from 〈sprots〉 to 『sports』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: i decide to do more sprots to stay healthy.i plan to go swimming every
correct_sentence: I decide to do more sports to stay healthy. I plan to go swimming every weekend.
error: healthy.i
correction: healthy. I
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: A space is missing after the period here, so a space is added after 〈healthy.〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of its position at the beginning or in the middle, thus 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: weekends.and i will also eat healthy food to keep healthy.
correct_sentence: I plan to go swimming every weekend. And I will also eat healthy food to keep healthy, such as rice, noodles, chicken soup, beef, fruit and vegetables.

error: weekends.and i
correction: weekend. And I
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: 〈every〉 modifies a singular countable noun, thus 〈weekends〉 is changed to the singular 『weekend』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Space Error: A space is missing after the period here, so a space is added after 『weekend.』 to conform to writing conventions; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, thus 〈and〉 needs to be changed to 『And』 to conform to the convention; ④ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of its position at the beginning or in the middle, thus 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: weekends.and i will also eat healthy food to keep healthy. Such as rice , noodles,chicken suop,feef,fruit and vegetable.

correct_sentence: And I will also eat healthy food to keep healthy, such as rice, noodles, chicken soup, beef, fruit and vegetables.

error: .Such
correction: , such
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: When 〈Such as〉 is used for exemplification, it needs to be connected to the preceding main clause with a comma, thus the period 〈.Such〉 is changed to a comma 『, such』; ② Space Error: A space is missing after the comma 『,』 and before the following word, so a space is added after 『,』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: Such as rice , noodles,chicken suop,feef,fruit and vegetable.

correct_sentence: And I will also eat healthy food to keep healthy, such as rice, noodles, chicken soup, beef, fruit and vegetables.

error: suop,feef
correction: soup, beef
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'soup', thus 〈suop〉 is a misspelling of 『soup』; it needs to be changed from 〈suop〉 to 『soup』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Space Error: A space is missing after the comma 〈,〉 and before the following word, so a space is added after 〈,〉 to conform to writing conventions; ③ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'beef', thus 〈feef〉 is a misspelling of 『beef』; it needs to be changed from 〈feef〉 to 『beef』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Such as rice , noodles,chicken suop,feef,fruit and vegetable.

correct_sentence: And I will also eat healthy food to keep healthy, such as rice, noodles, chicken soup, beef, fruit and vegetables.

error: vegetable
correction: vegetables
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈vegetable〉 is a countable noun, and the plural form 『vegetables』 should be used here to fit the context of expressing 'various vegetables', thus 〈vegetable〉 is changed to 『vegetables』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: This is our New Year's plan.i hope we will have a good tome.
correct_sentence: This is our New Year's plan. I hope we will have a good time.
error: plan.i
correction: plan. I
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The comma 〈,〉 here is missing a space after it and before the following word, so a space is added after 〈,〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of its position at the beginning or in the middle, thus 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: This is our New Year's plan.i hope we will have a good tome.
correct_sentence: I hope we will have a good time.
error: tome
correction: time
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'time', thus 〈tome〉 is a misspelling of 『time』; it needs to be changed from 〈tome〉 to 『time』 to make the sentence coherent.