Writing prompt: My Life in the Future

Student essay:
After ten years,I will be 27 years old.I will be a teacher in a senior high school.My students are quite clever and active.I lead a busy and meaningful life. What is more,I will have a family with two children and a husband. On workdays, l am too busy to do houswork.
Instead, in the holidays ,l like to wear more casually.l will do a great deal of exercise to keep fit.As far as l am concerned, l will have a colorful life.
Inll a word,after ten years, l will lead a much richer and more wonderful life.l cannot wait to grow up quickly.

Corrected essay:
After ten years, I will be 27 years old. I will be a teacher in a senior high school. My students will be quite clever and active. I will lead a busy and meaningful life. What is more, I will have a family with two children and a husband. On workdays, I will be too busy to do housework.
Instead, on the holidays, I will like to dress more casually. I will do a great deal of exercise to keep fit. As far as I am concerned, I will have a colorful life.
In a word, after ten years, I will lead a much richer and more wonderful life. I cannot wait to grow up quickly.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My students are quite clever and active.
correct_sentence: My students will be quite clever and active.
error: are
correction: will be
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt requirements, the simple future tense should be used, while 〈are〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense, so 〈are〉 needs to be changed to the simple future tense 『will be』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I lead a busy and meaningful life.
correct_sentence: I will lead a busy and meaningful life.
correction: will
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt requirements, the simple future tense should be used, while 〈lead〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense, so 〈lead〉 needs to be changed to the simple future tense 『will lead』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: On workdays, l am too busy to do houswork.

correct_sentence: On workdays, I will be too busy to do housework.

error: l am
correction: I will be
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈l〉 here needs to be capitalized, so 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to standard spelling rules; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt requirements, the simple future tense should be used, while 〈am〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense, so 〈am〉 needs to be changed to the simple future tense 『will be』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: On workdays, l am too busy to do houswork.

correct_sentence: On workdays, I will be too busy to do housework.

error: houswork
correction: housework
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express “housework”, so 〈houswork〉 is a misspelling of 『housework』, and 〈houswork〉 needs to be changed to 『housework』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.
error_sentence: Instead, in the holidays ,l like to wear more casually.l will do a great deal of exercise to keep fit.
correct_sentence: Instead, on the holidays, I will like to dress more casually.
error: in
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 『on』 is used for specific dates or periods of a day; 〈in the holidays〉 in the original sentence is an incorrect expression, so 〈in〉 is changed to 『on』 to conform to English expression habits.
error_sentence: Instead, in the holidays ,l like to wear more casually.l will do a great deal of exercise to keep fit.
correct_sentence: Instead, on the holidays, I will like to dress more casually.
error: l
correction: I will
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈l〉 here needs to be capitalized, so 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to standard spelling rules; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt requirements, the simple future tense should be used, while 〈like〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense, so 〈like〉 needs to be changed to the simple future tense 『will like』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: Instead, in the holidays ,l like to wear more casually.l will do a great deal of exercise to keep fit.
correct_sentence: Instead, on the holidays, I will like to dress more casually. I will do a great deal of exercise to keep fit.
error: wear more casually.l
correction: dress more casually. I
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means “dressing”; 〈wear〉 in the original sentence emphasizes the action of wearing, which does not fit the meaning, so 〈wear〉 needs to be changed to 『dress』 to fit the context; ② Space Error: According to English writing norms, there needs to be a space between punctuation and words; 〈casually.l〉 in the original sentence lacks a space, so 〈casually.l〉 needs to be changed to 『casually. I』 to conform to writing norms; ③ Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈l〉 here needs to be capitalized, so 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to standard spelling rules.
error_sentence: As far as l am concerned, l will have a colorful life.

correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I will have a colorful life.

error: l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈l〉 here needs to be capitalized, so 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to standard spelling rules.
error_sentence: As far as l am concerned, l will have a colorful life.

correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I will have a colorful life.

error: l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈l〉 here needs to be capitalized, so 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to standard spelling rules.
error_sentence: Inll a word,after ten years, l will lead a much richer and more wonderful life.l cannot wait to grow up quickly.
correct_sentence: In a word, after ten years, I will lead a much richer and more wonderful life.
error: Inll
correction: In
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express “in a word”, so 〈Inll〉 is a misspelling of 『In』, and 〈Inll〉 needs to be changed to 『In』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.
error_sentence: Inll a word,after ten years, l will lead a much richer and more wonderful life.l cannot wait to grow up quickly.
correct_sentence: In a word, after ten years, I will lead a much richer and more wonderful life.
error: l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈l〉 here needs to be capitalized, so 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to standard spelling rules.
error_sentence: Inll a word,after ten years, l will lead a much richer and more wonderful life.l cannot wait to grow up quickly.
correct_sentence: In a word, after ten years, I will lead a much richer and more wonderful life. I cannot wait to grow up quickly.
error: life.l
correction: life. I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing norms, there needs to be a space between punctuation and words; 〈life.l〉 in the original sentence lacks a space, so 〈life.l〉 needs to be changed to 『life. I』 to conform to writing norms; ② Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈l〉 here needs to be capitalized, so 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to standard spelling rules.