Writing prompt: Report

Student essay:
Last Friday,The thing which is moving took place at school.
A student fainted suddenly during the break between classes,but other students were calm when they saw it.Some of them called"120" at once,others looked for the teachers at the same time.The teachers knew it and arrived there soon.They saw the weak student and then noticed that it 's serious.At the moment the car came,and the student helped her go into the car.And they sent her to the hospital.She was treated in time,and her life was safe.The teachers also call for her parents and told them good news.Her parents appreciated a lot.
From the thing,we know the students are calm,kind and helpful.They helped the people who are in trouble.I think their thing can be admired.

Corrected essay:
Last Friday, a thing which is moving took place at school.
A student fainted suddenly during the break between classes, but other students were calm when they saw it. Some of them called "120" at once. Others looked for the teachers at the same time. The teachers knew it and arrived there soon. They saw the weak student and then noticed that it was serious. At the moment the car came, and the students helped her get into the car. And they sent her to the hospital. She was treated in time, and her life was saved. The teachers also called her parents and told them the good news. Her parents appreciated it a lot. From this thing, we know the students are calm, kind and helpful. They helped the people who were in trouble. I think their actions can be admired.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Last Friday,The thing which is moving took place at school.

correct_sentence: Last Friday, a thing which is moving took place at school.

error: The
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, when mentioning a non-specific thing for the first time, the indefinite article 『a』 should be used instead of the definite article 〈The〉, therefore 〈The〉 is changed to 『a』 to conform to English habits.
error_sentence: Some of them called"120" at once,others looked for the teachers at the same time.
correct_sentence: Some of them called "120" at once.
error: called"120
correction: called "120
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space needs to be preserved before a direct quotation mark to conform to writing conventions, therefore in the original sentence 〈called"120〉 needs to be changed to 『called "120』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: Some of them called"120" at once,others looked for the teachers at the same time.
correct_sentence: Some of them called "120" at once. Others looked for the teachers at the same time.
error: ,others
correction: . Others
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent main clauses need to be separated by a period to avoid run-on sentences; in the original sentence, 〈Some of them...〉 and 〈others looked for...〉 are two main clauses, therefore 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 to conform to grammar.
error_sentence: They saw the weak student and then noticed that it 's serious.
correct_sentence: They saw the weak student and then noticed that it was serious.
error: 's
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the simple past tense should be used, while in the original sentence 〈's〉 is in the simple present tense, therefore 〈's〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『was』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: At the moment the car came,and the student helped her go into the car.
correct_sentence: At the moment the car came, and the students helped her get into the car.
error: student
correction: students
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “students” as a general reference, and the plural form of the noun should be used, while in the original sentence 〈student〉 is singular, therefore 〈student〉 needs to be changed to 『students』 to be consistent with the context.
error_sentence: At the moment the car came,and the student helped her go into the car.
correct_sentence: At the moment the car came, and the students helped her get into the car.
error: go
correction: get
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means “enter the vehicle”; in the original sentence, 〈go into〉 failed to accurately express the intended action and does not fit the meaning, therefore 〈go into〉 needs to be changed to 『get into』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: She was treated in time,and her life was safe.
correct_sentence: She was treated in time, and her life was saved.
error: safe
correction: saved
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “was saved”; in the original sentence, the adjective 〈safe〉 indicating a state of safety does not fit the context, therefore 〈safe〉 needs to be changed to the past participle of the verb 『saved』 to indicate the result of the action of saving a life.
error_sentence: The teachers also call for her parents and told them good news.
correct_sentence: The teachers also called her parents and told them the good news.
error: call for
correction: called
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the simple past tense should be used, while in the original sentence 〈call〉 is in the simple present tense, therefore 〈call〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『called』 to fit the context; ② Preposition Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “to call someone (on the phone)”; in the original sentence, 〈call for〉 means “to demand”, the preposition is redundant and does not fit the meaning, therefore 〈call for〉 needs to be changed to 『called』 to express the action of making a phone call.
error_sentence: The teachers also call for her parents and told them good news.
correct_sentence: The teachers also called her parents and told them the good news.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English idiomatic expression, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; 〈good news〉 refers to the good news of a specific event and usually requires the article 『the』, therefore 〈good news〉 in the sentence is changed to 『the good news』 to conform to English idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: Her parents appreciated a lot.

correct_sentence: Her parents appreciated it a lot.
correction: it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express “appreciated it”. The verb 〈appreciated〉 needs an object to refer to the aforementioned event. 『it』 should be added as an object, referring to the specific object of gratitude. Therefore, 〈appreciated a lot〉 is changed to 『appreciated it a lot』 to express a possessive relationship and fit the context.
error_sentence: Her parents appreciated a lot.
 From the thing,we know the students are calm,kind and helpful.
correct_sentence: From this thing, we know the students are calm, kind and helpful.
error: 
From the
correction: From this
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits and the context, the determiner 〈the〉 is not suitable for this context, therefore 〈the〉 is changed to 『this』 to specifically refer to the event mentioned earlier, in order to conform to expression norms and the context.
error_sentence: They helped the people who are in trouble.
correct_sentence: They helped the people who were in trouble.
error: are
correction: were
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the simple past tense should be used, while in the original sentence 〈are〉 is in the simple present tense, therefore 〈are〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『were』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I think their thing can be admired.
correct_sentence: I think their actions can be admired.
error: thing
correction: actions
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “actions”; 〈thing〉 is too general and does not fit the context, therefore 〈thing〉 needs to be changed to 『actions』 to fit the context.