Writing prompt: Being a Good Listener

Student essay:
Nawadays, listening is very important for us in our life. We should look up to speakers when they talk about something who is going to listen to parents of children and understand and eliminate the generation gap. The teacher listens to the students and understands students and meets their needs. Students listen to each other can improve our friendship. They can teach and learn. So, listen to the comprehension, to establish a good interpersonal relationship.
If we do not learn to listen, then, we may be difficult to find in society. Only learn to listen, and others will listen to you, will respect you, used to make friends with you.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays, listening is very important for us in our life. We should look up to speakers when they talk about something, listen to parents or children and understand and eliminate the generation gap. The teacher listens to the students and understands students and meets their needs. Students listening to each other can improve their friendship. They can teach and learn from each other. So, listen with comprehension to establish good interpersonal relationships.
If we do not learn to listen, then, we may find it difficult in society. Only by learning to listen will others listen to you, respect you, and want to make friends with you.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Nawadays, listening is very important for us in our life.
correct_sentence: Nowadays, listening is very important for us in our life.
error: Nawadays
correction: Nowadays
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'today', so 〈Nawadays〉 is a misspelling of 『Nowadays』; it needs to be changed from 〈Nawadays〉 to 『Nowadays』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: We should look up to speakers when they talk about something who is going to listen to parents of children and understand and eliminate the generation gap.
correct_sentence: We should look up to speakers when they talk about something, listen to parents or children and understand and eliminate the generation gap.
error: who is going to
correction: ,
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the context, this means 'listen', and it is in a parallel structure with the preceding 〈talk about〉; the original phrase 〈who is going to〉 is redundant, so it needs to be changed from 〈who is going to〉 to 『,』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: We should look up to speakers when they talk about something who is going to listen to parents of children and understand and eliminate the generation gap.
correct_sentence: We should look up to speakers when they talk about something, listen to parents or children and understand and eliminate the generation gap.
error: of
correction: or
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the context, this means 'parents or children'; the original preposition 〈of〉 is used incorrectly, so it needs to be changed from 〈of〉 to 『or』 to express the alternative relationship between parents and children, in order to fit the context.
error_sentence: Students listen to each other can improve our friendship.
correct_sentence: Students listening to each other can improve their friendship.
error: listen
correction: listening
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when a verb acts as a subject, the gerund form is required; therefore, in the original sentence, when the verb 〈listen〉 acts as the subject, it needs to be in the gerund form 『listening』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Students listen to each other can improve our friendship.
correct_sentence: Students listening to each other can improve their friendship.
error: our
correction: their
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'their'; in the original sentence, 〈our〉 is inconsistent in person with the subject 〈Students〉, so 〈our〉 is changed to 『their』 to indicate possession and fit the context.
error_sentence: They can teach and learn.
correct_sentence: They can teach and learn from each other.
correction: from each other
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the context, this means 'learn from each other'; the original sentence is missing a prepositional phrase, so 『from each other』 needs to be added to make the meaning complete.
error_sentence: So, listen to the comprehension, to establish a good interpersonal relationship.

correct_sentence: So, listen with comprehension to establish good interpersonal relationships.

error: to the comprehension,
correction: with comprehension
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the original preposition 〈to〉 is incorrectly collocated; therefore, 〈to〉 needs to be changed to 『with』 to mean 'with understanding' to fit the context; ② Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the determiner 『the』 indicates specificity; in the original sentence, the abstract noun 〈comprehension〉 here expresses a general concept and does not require the definite article 〈the〉, so 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to English expression habits.
error_sentence: So, listen to the comprehension, to establish a good interpersonal relationship.

correct_sentence: So, listen with comprehension to establish good interpersonal relationships.

error: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, an article is not needed before a plural noun; the original 〈relationships〉 does not require an article before it, so the redundant article 〈a〉 is deleted to conform to English grammar.
error_sentence: So, listen to the comprehension, to establish a good interpersonal relationship.

correct_sentence: So, listen with comprehension to establish good interpersonal relationships.

error: relationship
correction: relationships
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English expression habits, 〈relationship〉 should be in the plural form 『relationships』 to denote multifaceted relations; therefore, 〈relationship〉 needs to be changed to 『relationships』 to conform to expression habits.
error_sentence: If we do not learn to listen, then, we may be difficult to find in society.
correct_sentence: If we do not learn to listen, then, we may find it difficult in society.
error: be difficult to find
correction: find it difficult
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, it is intended to express 'find it difficult to do something'; the structure of the original phrase 〈be difficult to find〉 is confused, so it needs to be changed from 〈be difficult to find〉 to 『find it difficult』 to fit the meaning.
error_sentence: Only learn to listen, and others will listen to you, will respect you, used to make friends with you.
correct_sentence: Only by learning to listen will others listen to you, respect you, and want to make friends with you.
error: learn
correction: by learning
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the context, this means 'only by learning'; the preposition 『by』 is missing in the original sentence, so 〈learn〉 needs to be changed to 『by learning』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: Only learn to listen, and others will listen to you, will respect you, used to make friends with you.
correct_sentence: Only by learning to listen will others listen to you, respect you, and want to make friends with you.
error: , and others will
correction: will others
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English expression habits, a sentence starting with 'Only + adverbial' requires subject-verb inversion; the structure of the original phrase 〈, and others will〉 is incorrect, so it needs to be changed from 〈, and others will〉 to 『will others』 to conform to expression habits.
error_sentence: Only learn to listen, and others will listen to you, will respect you, used to make friends with you.
correct_sentence: Only by learning to listen will others listen to you, respect you, and want to make friends with you.
error: will
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression habits, a word repeated twice only needs to be kept once; in the original sentence, 〈will〉 appears twice, so deleting the second redundant 〈will〉 can make the sentence more concise without affecting its meaning.
error_sentence: Only learn to listen, and others will listen to you, will respect you, used to make friends with you.
correct_sentence: Only by learning to listen will others listen to you, respect you, and want to make friends with you.
error: used
correction: and want
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, the original phrases 〈respect you〉 and 〈used to make friends with you〉, as parallel structures, require the conjunction 『and』 to connect them; therefore, the original sentence needs to add 『and』 to comply with English grammar rules; ② Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means 'want'; in the original sentence, 〈used〉 means 'formerly', which does not fit the meaning, so 〈used〉 needs to be changed to 『want』 to fit the context.