Writing prompt: My Past Life

Student essay:
It's been two years,two years ago,I was a junior high school student.It happened a lot of things,but all of it are little things.I can barely remember those.I just remember one thing in junior high school.In 2013,We had PE lesson,In that PE,we had many sport to do,running,rope skiing,Jumping...I was so tired that I fell in a faint.Two of us came to help me.They knew I can't walk anymore,so they put my arms to their shoulder and sent me infirmary.I won't fotget it because I really appreciate them.

Corrected essay:
It's been two years. Two years ago, I was a junior high school student. A lot of things happened, but all of them were little things. I can barely remember those. I just remember one thing in junior high school. In 2013, we had a PE lesson. In that PE lesson, we had many sports to do. Running, rope skipping, jumping... I was so tired that I fell in a faint. Two of my classmates came to help me. They knew I couldn't walk anymore, so they put my arms on their shoulders and sent me to the infirmary. I won't forget it because I really appreciate them.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: It's been two years,two years ago,I was a junior high school student.
correct_sentence: It's been two years. Two years ago, I was a junior high school student.
error: ,two
correction: . Two
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent complete sentences 〈It's been two years〉 and 〈two years ago...〉 cannot be connected only by a comma. The connecting comma 〈,〉 needs to be changed to a period 『.』 to achieve correct sentence separation, forming the standard expression 『It's been two years. Two years ago...』. ② Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space is needed between a comma and the following word, so a space is added between the comma and 〈two〉 in the original sentence to comply with the norm; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter after a period must be capitalized. Therefore, the incorrect 〈,two〉 structure is adjusted to 『. Two』 to ensure the basic format requirement of a capitalized first letter after a period.
error_sentence: It happened a lot of things,but all of it are little things.
correct_sentence: A lot of things happened, but all of them were little things.
error: It happened a
correction: A
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: There is a semantic contradiction when the subject 〈It〉 is paired with the predicate 〈happened〉, as "It happened" is unclear in meaning. According to the intended meaning, the redundant structure 〈It happened 〉 should be deleted and replaced with the specific subject 『A lot of things happened』, which both conforms to the subject-verb structure and accurately conveys the meaning "A lot of things happened".
error_sentence: It happened a lot of things,but all of it are little things.
correct_sentence: A lot of things happened, but all of them were little things.
correction: happened
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence 〈It happened a lot of things〉 has a grammatical error; when "it" acts as a formal subject, it needs to be paired with a specific structure. It is adjusted to the natural word order 『A lot of things happened』, so that the subject 〈things〉 and the predicate 〈happened〉 form a correct subject-verb relationship.
error_sentence: It happened a lot of things,but all of it are little things.
correct_sentence: A lot of things happened, but all of them were little things.
error: it are
correction: them were
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: When a pronoun refers to the plural noun 〈things〉, the plural form should be used. Therefore, the singular pronoun 〈it〉 is changed to the plural pronoun 『them』 to maintain number agreement between the pronoun and its antecedent; ② Verb Tense Error: In the context of describing past events, the linking verb needs to be in the past tense. The present tense 〈are〉 is changed to the past tense 『were』, forming 『things were...』 to maintain tense consistency throughout the text (past time frame).
error_sentence: In 2013,We had PE lesson,In that PE,we had many sport to do,running,rope skiing,Jumping...I was so tired that I fell in a faint.
correct_sentence: In 2013, we had a PE lesson.
error: 2013,We had
correction: 2013, we had a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a comma is used to separate the year from the main clause. The original sentence 〈In 2013,We〉 lacks a space after the comma; it should be corrected to 『In 2013, we』 to ensure a standard space is kept after the punctuation. ② Case Error: According to English writing rules, the first letter after a comma should not be capitalized (unless it is a proper noun). The incorrectly capitalized 〈We〉 is changed to lowercase 『we』, forming the standard format 『In 2013, we』; ③ Determiner Error: As a countable noun phrase, 〈PE lesson〉 requires an indefinite article when first mentioned. Therefore, 『a』 is added before 〈PE lesson〉, forming 『a PE lesson』 to comply with article usage rules.
error_sentence: In 2013,We had PE lesson,In that PE,we had many sport to do,running,rope skiing,Jumping...I was so tired that I fell in a faint.
correct_sentence: In 2013, we had a PE lesson.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: Two complete sentences 〈In 2013,we had PE lesson〉 and 〈we had many sports...〉 cannot be connected by a comma. The incorrect comma is changed to a period 『.』 to form correct sentence separation.
error_sentence: In 2013,We had PE lesson,In that PE,we had many sport to do,running,rope skiing,Jumping...I was so tired that I fell in a faint.
correct_sentence: In that PE lesson, we had many sports to do.
correction: lesson
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: Using 〈PE〉 alone may cause ambiguity (it can refer to the subject or a specific class). Based on the context, the complete noun 『PE lesson』 is added, which clearly refers to "physical education class" and maintains noun integrity.
error_sentence: In 2013,We had PE lesson,In that PE,we had many sport to do,running,rope skiing,Jumping...I was so tired that I fell in a faint.
correct_sentence: In that PE lesson, we had many sports to do.
error: sport
correction: sports
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: The determiner 〈many〉 requires a plural noun. The singular 〈sport〉 is changed to the plural 『sports』 to ensure number agreement in 『many sports』.
error_sentence: In 2013,We had PE lesson,In that PE,we had many sport to do,running,rope skiing,Jumping...I was so tired that I fell in a faint.
correct_sentence: In that PE lesson, we had many sports to do. Running, rope skipping, jumping...
error: ,running
correction: . Running
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The independent main clause 〈we had many sports to do〉 and the present participle structure 〈running...〉 cannot be connected by a comma. It is changed to a period to separate the two complete structures, i.e., 『...to do. Running...』 to comply with syntactic rules. ② Space Error: According to English written expression norms, a word following a punctuation mark needs to have a space after the mark, so 〈,running〉 should be changed to 『. Running』 to comply with English written expression norms; ③ Case Error: According to English writing rules, the first letter after a sentence should be capitalized. The incorrectly lowercase 〈running〉 is changed to uppercase 『Running』, forming the standard format 『. Running』.
error_sentence: In 2013,We had PE lesson,In that PE,we had many sport to do,running,rope skiing,Jumping...I was so tired that I fell in a faint.
correct_sentence: Running, rope skipping, jumping...
error: skiing,Jumping
correction: skipping, jumping
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to sports terminology norms, 〈rope skiing〉 is an incorrect expression; the correct term should be 『rope skipping』 to express the meaning of "jump rope," requiring the entire phrase to be replaced for accuracy. ② Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space needs to be kept after the comma between items in a list. The incorrect 〈skiing,Jumping〉 is changed to the standard format 『skipping, jumping』 to ensure a standard space after the punctuation; ③ Case Error: In a list of items, the first letter of a non-proper noun should not be capitalized. The incorrectly capitalized 〈Jumping〉 is changed to lowercase 『jumping』 to maintain format consistency in 『skipping, jumping』.
error_sentence: Two of us came to help me.
correct_sentence: Two of my classmates came to help me.
error: us
correction: my classmates
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: 〈Two of us〉 has an unclear reference issue; based on the context, it should be specified as 『Two of my classmates』, which clarifies both the quantity and the referent.
error_sentence: They knew I can't walk anymore,so they put my arms to their shoulder and sent me infirmary.
correct_sentence: They knew I couldn't walk anymore, so they put my arms on their shoulders and sent me to the infirmary.
error: ca
correction: could
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: The entire text is a past tense narrative, and modal verbs need to maintain tense consistency. The present tense 〈can't〉 is changed to the past tense 『couldn't』, forming the correct tense structure 『they couldn't...』.
error_sentence: They knew I can't walk anymore,so they put my arms to their shoulder and sent me infirmary.
correct_sentence: They knew I couldn't walk anymore, so they put my arms on their shoulders and sent me to the infirmary.
error: to their shoulder
correction: on their shoulders
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: The verb 〈put〉 is incorrectly paired with the preposition; to express "put...on the shoulder," 『on』 should be used. The incorrect 〈put...to〉 is changed to 『put...on』, forming the standard collocation 『put them on their shoulders』; ② Noun Number Error: The subject 〈they〉 is plural, so the corresponding body part noun needs to be in the plural form. The singular 〈shoulder〉 is changed to the plural 『shoulders』 to ensure number agreement in 『their shoulders』.
error_sentence: They knew I can't walk anymore,so they put my arms to their shoulder and sent me infirmary.
correct_sentence: They knew I couldn't walk anymore, so they put my arms on their shoulders and sent me to the infirmary.
correction: to the
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: When the verb 〈sent〉 is followed by a destination, the preposition 『to』 is required. 『to』 is added before 〈infirmary〉, forming the complete prepositional structure 『sent me to the infirmary』; ② Determiner Error: As a specific place, 〈infirmary〉 requires the definite article. 『the』 is added to form 『the infirmary』, consistent with the specific meaning of "the school infirmary".
error_sentence: I won't fotget it because I really appreciate them.
correct_sentence: I won't forget it because I really appreciate them.
error: fotget
correction: forget
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈fotget〉 is a typical letter order error; it is corrected to the base form of the verb 『forget』 to ensure accurate spelling in 『I won't forget』, expressing the meaning "to forget".