Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
Hello,everyone.My name is L.Today,I'll talk you with my favourite festival.My favourite festival is Mother's Day.So,why do I like it?
Firstly,in many western festivals,Mother's Day is most warmth and make sense.Secondly,I prefer Mother's Day because it can let us experience the affection and the affection of the mother.Thirdly,we can be grateful to her mother,return her love.
It is obvious that we all love our mother,so I am looking forward to Chinese mother's Day.And set it as a statutory holiday.like this,we can let all people love her.

Corrected essay:
Hello, everyone. My name is L. Today, I'll talk to you about my favourite festival. My favourite festival is Mother's Day. So, why do I like it?
Firstly, in many western festivals, Mother's Day is the warmest and most meaningful. Secondly, I prefer Mother's Day because it can let us experience the affection and the affection of a mother. Thirdly, we can be grateful to our mother and return her love.
It is obvious that we all love our mother, so I am looking forward to a Chinese Mother's Day and setting it as a statutory holiday. Like this, we can let all people love their mothers.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My name is L.Today,I'll talk you with my favourite festival.
correct_sentence: My name is L. Today, I'll talk to you about my favourite festival.
error: L.Today,I'll talk you with
correction: L. Today, I'll talk to you about
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, there should be a space between punctuation and words; the original sentence 〈L.Today,I'll〉 lacks a space, so 〈L.Today,I'll〉 needs to be changed to 『L. Today, I'll』 to conform to writing conventions; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the correct structure of the verb phrase 〈talk〉 should be "talk to someone about something"; the preposition in the original sentence 〈talk you with〉 is incorrect, so 〈talk you with〉 needs to be changed to 『talk to you about』 to conform to expression habits.
error_sentence: Firstly,in many western festivals,Mother's Day is most warmth and make sense.
correct_sentence: Firstly, in many western festivals, Mother's Day is the warmest and most meaningful.
error: most warmth and make sense
correction: the warmest and most meaningful
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈warmth〉 is a noun, while an adjective in the superlative form is needed here, it should be changed to the adjective 『warmest』, therefore 〈most warmth〉 needs to be changed to 『the warmest』 to fit the context; ② Adjective Error: According to the context, the intention here is to express "very meaningful", an adjective should be used; 〈make sense〉 is a verb phrase and does not fit the meaning, therefore 〈make sense〉 needs to be changed to 『most meaningful』 to fit the semantics.
error_sentence: Secondly,I prefer Mother's Day because it can let us experience the affection and the affection of the mother.
correct_sentence: Secondly, I prefer Mother's Day because it can let us experience the affection and the affection of a mother.
error: the
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 〈the〉 indicates specificity, but in the context, 〈mother〉 does not clearly refer to a specific object, so the original 〈the〉 is changed to 『a』 to conform to grammar rules and context.
error_sentence: Thirdly,we can be grateful to her mother,return her love.

correct_sentence: Thirdly, we can be grateful to our mother and return her love.

error: her mother,
correction: our mother and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express "our"; the original 〈her〉 is incorrect and should be 『our』, so 〈her〉 is changed to 『our』 to indicate possession and fit the context; ② Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, the parallel structures 〈be grateful〉 and 〈return her love〉 in the original sentence need to be connected by 『and』, therefore the original 〈,〉 needs to be changed to 『and』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: It is obvious that we all love our mother,so I am looking forward to Chinese mother's Day.
correct_sentence: It is obvious that we all love our mother, so I am looking forward to a Chinese Mother's Day and setting it as a statutory holiday.
error: Chinese mother
correction: a Chinese Mother
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, an indefinite article 『a』 needs to be added before the name of a festival, so the original 〈Chinese mother〉 needs to be changed to 『a Chinese Mother』 to conform to expression habits; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized; 〈mother's Day〉 is a proper noun meaning "Mother's Day", so 〈mother's Day〉 needs to be changed to 『Mother's Day』 to conform to conventions.
error_sentence: It is obvious that we all love our mother,so I am looking forward to Chinese mother's Day. And set it as a statutory holiday.like this,we can let all people love her.
correct_sentence: It is obvious that we all love our mother, so I am looking forward to a Chinese Mother's Day and setting it as a statutory holiday.
error: .And set
correction: and setting
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, a period is not needed before the conjunction 〈And〉 to separate parallel structures, so 〈.And〉 needs to be changed to 『and』 to conform to expression habits; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈looking forward to〉 is followed by a gerund to mean "look forward to doing something", so 〈set〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to 『setting』 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: And set it as a statutory holiday.like this,we can let all people love her.
correct_sentence: It is obvious that we all love our mother, so I am looking forward to a Chinese Mother's Day and setting it as a statutory holiday. Like this, we can let all people love their mothers.
error: holiday.like
correction: holiday. Like
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, there should be a space between punctuation and words; the original sentence 〈holiday.like〉 lacks a space, so 〈holiday.like〉 needs to be changed to 『holiday. Like』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: And set it as a statutory holiday.like this,we can let all people love her.
correct_sentence: Like this, we can let all people love their mothers.
error: her
correction: their mothers
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express "their mothers"; the original 〈her〉 is a singular pronoun and does not agree with the plural subject 〈all people〉, so 〈her〉 is changed to 『their mothers』 to indicate possession and fit the context.