Writing prompt: Being a Good Listener

Student essay:
To build a good relationship with others in our life, we should be a good listener. On account of listening,we can know more about those who we love,and who love us .
Parents listen to their kid so that then can understand their kid well and remove generation gap. Parents can learn about their child's world by listening to their child , instead of objecting to their dreams.
Teachers listen to their students in order to meet students' requirement. Through listening, teachers can know about what makes their students puzzled to develop a wonderful relationship between teaching and learning.
Classmates listen to their classmates to improve their friendship . Being a good listener , they can help each other .
On my personal note, to be a good listener, what we need to do is show our respect for talkers. When listening , don't interrupt others. Then we should consider things on others' position, so we can understand their puzzlements well.
Be a good listener , you will find a more beautiful world.

Corrected essay:
To build a good relationship with others in our life, we should be a good listener. On account of listening, we can know more about those who we love, and who love us.
Parents listen to their kids so that they can understand their kids well and remove the generation gap. Parents can learn about their child's world by listening to their child, instead of objecting to their dreams.
Teachers listen to their students in order to meet students' requirements. Through listening, teachers can know about what makes their students puzzled to develop a wonderful relationship between teaching and learning. Classmates listen to their classmates to improve their friendship. Being a good listener, they can help each other. On my personal note, to be a good listener, what we need to do is show our respect for talkers. When listening, don't interrupt others. Then we should consider things from others' positions, so we can understand their puzzlements well.
Be a good listener, and you will find a more beautiful world.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Parents listen to their kid so that then can understand their kid well and remove generation gap.
correct_sentence: Parents listen to their kids so that they can understand their kids well and remove the generation gap.
error: kid
correction: kids
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The noun 〈kid〉 refers to multiple objects in the sentence and needs to be in the plural form; therefore, 〈kid〉 is changed to 『kids』 to fit the context of interaction between parents and children.
error_sentence: Parents listen to their kid so that then can understand their kid well and remove generation gap.
correct_sentence: Parents listen to their kids so that they can understand their kids well and remove the generation gap.
error: then
correction: they
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'they'; therefore, 〈then〉 is a misspelling of 『they』, and 〈then〉 needs to be changed to 『they』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Parents listen to their kid so that then can understand their kid well and remove generation gap.
correct_sentence: Parents listen to their kids so that they can understand their kids well and remove the generation gap.
error: kid
correction: kids
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The noun 〈kid〉 refers to multiple objects in the sentence and needs to be in the plural form; therefore, 〈kid〉 is changed to 『kids』 to fit the context of interaction between parents and children.
error_sentence: Parents listen to their kid so that then can understand their kid well and remove generation gap.
correct_sentence: Parents listen to their kids so that they can understand their kids well and remove the generation gap.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: Combined with the context, it is clear that this refers to the general concept of the generation gap; therefore, the definite article 『the』 is added before 〈generation〉 to clarify the meaning.
error_sentence: Teachers listen to their students in order to meet students' requirement.
correct_sentence: Teachers listen to their students in order to meet students' requirements.
error: requirement
correction: requirements
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: Noun Number Error: The plural form 『requirements』 should be used here to match the plural noun 〈students〉 mentioned earlier; therefore, 〈requirement〉 is changed to 『requirements』 to indicate the various needs of the students.
error_sentence: Through listening, teachers can know about what makes their students puzzled to develop a wonderful relationship between teaching and learning.

correct_sentence: Through listening, teachers can know about what makes their students puzzled to develop a wonderful relationship between teaching and learning. Classmates listen to their classmates to improve their friendship.
error: 

error_type: Punctuation Error
error_sentence: Being a good listener , they can help each other .

correct_sentence: Being a good listener, they can help each other. On my personal note, to be a good listener, what we need to do is show our respect for talkers.
error: 

error_sentence: Then we should consider things on others' position, so we can understand their puzzlements well.

correct_sentence: Then we should consider things from others' positions, so we can understand their puzzlements well.

error: on
correction: from
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The preposition 『from』 should be used here to mean 'from others' perspective'; therefore, 〈on〉 is changed to 『from』 to ensure semantic accuracy.
error_sentence: Then we should consider things on others' position, so we can understand their puzzlements well.

correct_sentence: Then we should consider things from others' positions, so we can understand their puzzlements well.

error: position
correction: positions
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The noun 〈position〉 needs to be in the plural form to match the plural meaning in the sentence; therefore, 〈position〉 is changed to 『positions』 to conform to grammatical logic.
error_sentence: Be a good listener , you will find a more beautiful world.
correct_sentence: Be a good listener, and you will find a more beautiful world.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: 〈Be a good listener〉 and 〈you will find a more beautiful world〉 can be independent clauses; therefore, 『and』 is added before 〈you〉 to meet the structural requirements of English compound sentences.