Writing prompt: Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother

Student essay:
Amy Chau,the professor of the Yale University, who had written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother", holding an American nation but a Chinese. The book introduced a tale including the writer and her two daughters , the writer educated her daughters with the strict Chinese traditional ways of education.A large amout of English words covered the book in many ways, which has positive meaning to improve the ability of students' reading.However, the approachings of the writer has caused violent argument in publics. Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has got the permission by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mother was still opposed to what writer had done.

Corrected essay:
Amy Chua, a professor of Yale University, who has written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother," holds American nationality but is Chinese by heritage. The book introduces a tale including the writer and her two daughters. The writer educated her daughters with the strict Chinese traditional ways of education. A large number of English words cover the book in many ways, which has a positive meaning to improve students' reading ability. However, the approaches of the writer have caused violent arguments in public. Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has been accepted by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mothers are still opposed to what the writer has done.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Amy Chau,the professor of the Yale University, who had written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother", holding an American nation but a Chinese.
correct_sentence: Amy Chua, a professor of Yale University, who has written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother," holds American nationality but is Chinese by heritage.
error: Chau,the
correction: Chua, a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express "educator Amy Chua", so 〈Chau〉 is a misspelling of 『Chua』, and it needs to be changed to 『Chua』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Space Error: There is a missing space after 〈,〉, so a space should be added after 〈,〉 to conform to writing conventions; ③ Determiner Error: In this sentence, "Amy Chua" has not been clearly identified previously, so 『a』 should be used here to indicate that she is a professor, and it is not specified that she is the only or specific professor, therefore 〈the〉 is changed to 『a』 to conform to grammatical logic.
error_sentence: Amy Chau,the professor of the Yale University, who had written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother", holding an American nation but a Chinese.
correct_sentence: Amy Chua, a professor of Yale University, who has written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother," holds American nationality but is Chinese by heritage.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy: The proper noun 〈Yale University〉 does not require an article before it, so 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to English expression habits.
error_sentence: Amy Chau,the professor of the Yale University, who had written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother", holding an American nation but a Chinese.
correct_sentence: Amy Chua, a professor of Yale University, who has written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother," holds American nationality but is Chinese by heritage.
error: had
correction: has
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: Considering the context, this describes an action completed by the author whose effect still exists, so the present perfect tense should be used, thus 〈had〉 is changed to 『has』 to conform to grammatical logic.
error_sentence: Amy Chau,the professor of the Yale University, who had written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother", holding an American nation but a Chinese.
correct_sentence: Amy Chua, a professor of Yale University, who has written a famous book named "Battle Hymn of the Tiger Mother," holds American nationality but is Chinese by heritage.
error: ", holding an American nation but a Chinese
correction: ," holds American nationality but is Chinese by heritage
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically confused and semantically unclear; considering the context, it is intended to express "she holds American nationality, but her heritage is Chinese", therefore 〈holding an American nation but a Chinese〉 is changed to 『holds American nationality but is Chinese by heritage』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: The book introduced a tale including the writer and her two daughters , the writer educated her daughters with the strict Chinese traditional ways of education.
correct_sentence: The book introduces a tale including the writer and her two daughters.
error: introduced
correction: introduces
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: When describing the content of a book, the simple present tense should be used because the book's content is a general fact, therefore 〈introduced〉 is changed to 『introduces』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: The book introduced a tale including the writer and her two daughters , the writer educated her daughters with the strict Chinese traditional ways of education.
correct_sentence: The book introduces a tale including the writer and her two daughters. The writer educated her daughters with the strict Chinese traditional ways of education.
error: , the
correction: . The
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈The book introduced a tale including the writer and her two daughters〉 and 〈the writer educated her daughters with the strict Chinese traditional ways of education〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, therefore 〈, the〉 is changed to 『. The』.
error_sentence: A large amout of English words covered the book in many ways, which has positive meaning to improve the ability of students' reading.
correct_sentence: A large number of English words cover the book in many ways, which has a positive meaning to improve students' reading ability.
error: amout
correction: number
error_sentence: A large amout of English words covered the book in many ways, which has positive meaning to improve the ability of students' reading.
correct_sentence: A large number of English words cover the book in many ways, which has a positive meaning to improve students' reading ability.
error: covered
correction: cover
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: When describing a general fact, the simple present tense should be used, therefore 〈covered〉 is changed to 『cover』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: A large amout of English words covered the book in many ways, which has positive meaning to improve the ability of students' reading.
correct_sentence: A large number of English words cover the book in many ways, which has a positive meaning to improve students' reading ability.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: 〈positive meaning〉 is a singular countable noun and needs to be modified by an indefinite article, therefore 『a』 is added before 〈positive〉 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: A large amout of English words covered the book in many ways, which has positive meaning to improve the ability of students' reading.
correct_sentence: A large number of English words cover the book in many ways, which has a positive meaning to improve students' reading ability.
error: the ability of
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: The correct expression is "students' reading ability", 〈the ability of〉 is redundant, therefore 〈the ability of〉 is deleted to make the sentence expression more concise.
error_sentence: A large amout of English words covered the book in many ways, which has positive meaning to improve the ability of students' reading.
correct_sentence: A large number of English words cover the book in many ways, which has a positive meaning to improve students' reading ability.
correction: ability
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: The correct expression is 『students' reading ability』, meaning "students' reading ability", therefore 『ability』 is added after 〈reading〉 to clearly express the sentence meaning.
error_sentence: However, the approachings of the writer has caused violent argument in publics.
correct_sentence: However, the approaches of the writer have caused violent arguments in public.
error: approachings
correction: approaches
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express "methods", so 〈approachings〉 is a misspelling of 『approaches』, and it needs to be changed to 『approaches』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: However, the approachings of the writer has caused violent argument in publics.
correct_sentence: However, the approaches of the writer have caused violent arguments in public.
error: has
correction: have
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 『approaches』 is plural, therefore 〈has〉 is changed to 『have』 to conform to subject-verb agreement rules.
error_sentence: However, the approachings of the writer has caused violent argument in publics.
correct_sentence: However, the approaches of the writer have caused violent arguments in public.
error: argument in publics
correction: arguments in public
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: Considering the context, 〈argument〉 is a plural concept, therefore 〈argument〉 is changed to 『arguments』 to conform to logic; ② Noun Error: The fixed phrase is 『in public』, therefore 〈publics〉 is changed to 『public』 to accurately express the concept of the public.
error_sentence: Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has got the permission by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mother was still opposed to what writer had done.
correct_sentence: Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has been accepted by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mothers are still opposed to what the writer has done.
error: got the permission
correction: been accepted
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: Considering the context, it is intended to express "although her seventeen-year-old daughter has been accepted by Yale and Harvard University", 〈permission〉 implies passive allowance, whereas university admission should use the active meaning of 『accepted』, therefore 〈got the permission〉 is changed to 『been accepted』 to accurately express the meaning of being admitted.
error_sentence: Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has got the permission by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mother was still opposed to what writer had done.
correct_sentence: Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has been accepted by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mothers are still opposed to what the writer has done.
error: mother was
correction: mothers are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: 〈mother〉 should be in the plural form to indicate a general reference, therefore 〈mother〉 is changed to 『mothers』 to conform to logic; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 『mothers』 is plural, and the tense is simple present, therefore 〈was〉 is changed to 『are』 to conform to subject-verb agreement rules.
error_sentence: Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has got the permission by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mother was still opposed to what writer had done.
correct_sentence: Though her seventeen-year-old daughter has been accepted by Yale and Harvard University, most Chinese mothers are still opposed to what the writer has done.
error: writer had
correction: the writer has
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The definite article 『the』 is needed before 〈writer〉 to specifically refer to the author mentioned earlier, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈writer〉 to conform to the rules for using articles with specific nouns in English; ② Verb Tense Error: Considering the context, this describes an action completed by the author whose effect still exists, so the present perfect tense should be used, thus 〈had〉 is changed to 『has』 to conform to grammatical logic.