Writing prompt: The Reason Why We Choose to Listen Music

Student essay:
Today mang people like to listen to the music. I like to listening music too.We listen to the music when we sleepping,or doing other things.
Why we like listen to the music so much.When I listening to the music,I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world while listen the music .So I think listen to the music can make we feel relaxing.It's good for our healthy.So,this is one of the reason we like listen to the music so much.
Some people think listening to the music can also let us feel exciting and give we much energy.
Listening to the music It's good for us.

Corrected essay:
Today many people like to listen to music. I like to listen to music too. We listen to music when we are sleeping or doing other things.
Why do we like to listen to music so much? When I listen to music, I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world. So I think listening to music can make us feel relaxed. It's good for our health. So, this is one of the reasons we like to listen to music so much.
Some people think listening to music can also let us feel excited and give us much energy.
Listening to music is good for us.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Today mang people like to listen to the music.
correct_sentence: Today many people like to listen to music.
error: mang
correction: many
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'many', therefore 〈mang〉 is a misspelling of 『many』, and needs to be changed to 『many』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Today mang people like to listen to the music.
correct_sentence: Today many people like to listen to music.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I like to listening music too.
correct_sentence: I like to listen to music too.
error: listening
correction: listen to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈like to〉 should be followed by the base form of the verb, therefore change the gerund form 〈listening〉 to the base form of the verb 『listen』; ② Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the phrasal verb 'listen to' is a fixed collocation, and the preposition 『to』 needs to be retained, therefore add 『to』.
error_sentence: We listen to the music when we sleepping,or doing other things.

correct_sentence: We listen to music when we are sleeping or doing other things.

error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 before it for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: We listen to the music when we sleepping,or doing other things.

correct_sentence: We listen to music when we are sleeping or doing other things.

error: sleepping,
correction: are sleeping
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Auxiliary Error: The continuous tense requires a 〈be verb + present participle〉 structure, the original sentence 〈when we sleepping〉 lacks a be verb, therefore a be verb 『are』 needs to be added; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'sleeping', therefore 〈sleepping〉 is a misspelling of 『sleeping』, and needs to be changed to 『sleeping』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Why we like listen to the music so much.
correct_sentence: Why do we like to listen to music so much?
correction: do
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to English grammar rules, interrogative sentences require the auxiliary verb 『do』 to achieve subject-verb inversion, therefore add 『do』 to comply with the English interrogative sentence structure.
error_sentence: Why we like listen to the music so much.
correct_sentence: Why do we like to listen to music so much?
correction: to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English expression habits, when the verb 〈like〉 is followed by an infinitive, 『to』 needs to be retained, therefore add 『to』 to form a correct sentence structure.
error_sentence: Why we like listen to the music so much.
correct_sentence: Why do we like to listen to music so much?
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Why we like listen to the music so much.
correct_sentence: Why do we like to listen to music so much?
error: .
correction: ?
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, the original sentence 〈Why do we like to listen to the music so much〉 is an interrogative sentence, and a question mark 『?』 should be used at the end instead of a period 〈.〉.
error_sentence: When I listening to the music,I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world while listen the music .So
correct_sentence: When I listen to music, I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world.
error: listening to the
correction: listen to
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: In the original sentence 〈When I listening to the music〉, the predicate verb 'listen' is in the present participle form; judging from the context, this should be simple present tense, therefore 〈listening〉 needs to be changed to 『listen』 to comply with the sentence structure; ② Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: When I listening to the music,I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world while listen the music .So
correct_sentence: When I listen to music, I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world. So I think listening to music can make us feel relaxed.
error: while listen the music .So
correction: . So
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈while listen the music〉 is semantically repetitive with the preceding 〈When I listen to music〉; deleting it makes the expression more concise.
error_sentence: I think listen to the music can make we feel relaxing.
correct_sentence: So I think listening to music can make us feel relaxed.
error: listen to the
correction: listening to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: Here 〈listen to the music〉 acts as the subject, so the base form of the verb 〈listen〉 needs to be changed to the gerund form 『listening 』 to serve as the subject; ② Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I think listen to the music can make we feel relaxing.
correct_sentence: So I think listening to music can make us feel relaxed.
error: we feel relaxing
correction: us feel relaxed
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈we〉 serves as the object of the verb 〈make〉, and needs to be in the objective case 『us』 instead of the subjective case 〈we〉; ② Adjective Error: 〈relaxing〉 modifies things, while 『relaxed』 is used to describe people's feelings; judging from the meaning of the sentence, 『relaxed』 should be used here to describe 'our' feelings.
error_sentence: It's good for our healthy.
correct_sentence: It's good for our health.
error: healthy
correction: health
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: Judging from the meaning of the sentence, a noun is needed here as the object of the preposition 〈for〉, so the adjective 〈healthy〉 should be changed to the noun form 『health』 to match the sentence structure.
error_sentence: So,this is one of the reason we like listen to the music so much.

correct_sentence: So, this is one of the reasons we like to listen to music so much.

error: reason
correction: reasons
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈one of the〉 refers to multiple items and must be followed by a plural noun, therefore change 〈reason〉 to 『reasons』.
error_sentence: So,this is one of the reason we like listen to the music so much.

correct_sentence: So, this is one of the reasons we like to listen to music so much.

correction: to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English expression habits, when the verb 〈like〉 is followed by an infinitive, 『to』 needs to be retained, therefore add 『to』 to form a correct sentence structure.
error_sentence: So,this is one of the reason we like listen to the music so much.

correct_sentence: So, this is one of the reasons we like to listen to music so much.

error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Some people think listening to the music can also let us feel exciting and give we much energy.

correct_sentence: Some people think listening to music can also let us feel excited and give us much energy.

error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Some people think listening to the music can also let us feel exciting and give we much energy.

correct_sentence: Some people think listening to music can also let us feel excited and give us much energy.

error: exciting
correction: excited
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adjective Error: 〈exciting〉 modifies things, while 『excited』 is used to describe people's feelings; judging from the meaning of the sentence, 『excited』 should be used here to describe 'our' feelings.
error_sentence: Some people think listening to the music can also let us feel exciting and give we much energy.

correct_sentence: Some people think listening to music can also let us feel excited and give us much energy.

error: we
correction: us
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈we〉 serves as the object of the verb 〈give〉, and needs to be in the objective case 『us』 instead of the subjective case 〈we〉.
error_sentence: Listening to the music It's good for us.
correct_sentence: Listening to music is good for us.
error: the music It's
correction: music is
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈music〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require the article 〈the〉 for modification, therefore delete 〈the〉 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is a simple sentence yet contains two subjects, which does not conform to English expression habits; change 〈It's〉 to 『is』 to form a correct sentence structure.