Writing prompt: Spring Festival

Student essay:
Chinese Spring Festival was hold in the end of the winter and the beginning of the spring.
During the Spring Festival, People usually have a long holiday.It about seven days.The whole families will have a big family get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival for get good luck in the new year.Of course, fish, meat and other delicious food are also important. People also use red lantern decorate a house and put on new clothes.
What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks,When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala.
This is Chinese Spring Festval-a traditional festval.

Corrected essay:
Chinese Spring Festival is held at the end of the winter and the beginning of the spring.
During the Spring Festival, people usually have a long holiday. It is about seven days. The whole family will have a big get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival to get good luck in the new year. Of course, fish, meat and other delicious food are also important. People also use red lanterns to decorate their houses and put on new clothes.
What's more, the children look forward to red envelope money, and they set off the fireworks. When night falls, dragon and lion dances and some other activities will be held during the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV.
This is the Chinese Spring Festival—a traditional festival.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Chinese Spring Festival was hold in the end of the winter and the beginning of the spring.

correct_sentence: Chinese Spring Festival is held at the end of the winter and the beginning of the spring.

error: was hold in
correction: is held at
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: 〈was hold〉 uses the wrong past tense and passive voice form; describing regular Spring Festival activities requires the simple present tense, so 〈was hold〉 is changed to 『is held』 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Preposition Error: The fixed phrase is “at the end of”, so 〈in〉 is changed to 『at』 to indicate a specific point in time.
error_sentence: During the Spring Festival, People usually have a long holiday.
correct_sentence: During the Spring Festival, people usually have a long holiday.
error: People
correction: people
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: 〈People〉 is not a proper noun, nor is it at the beginning of a sentence; the first letter should be lowercase, so 〈People〉 is changed to 『people』.
error_sentence: It about seven days.
correct_sentence: It is about seven days.
correction: is
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: The sentence is missing the predicate verb 〈is〉, so 『is』 is added after 〈It〉 to form a complete subject-verb structure.
error_sentence: The whole families will have a big family get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival for get good luck in the new year.
correct_sentence: The whole family will have a big get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival to get good luck in the new year.
error: families
correction: family
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The correct expression is 〈 The whole family 〉, meaning "the entire family", so 〈families〉 is changed to 『family』 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: The whole families will have a big family get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival for get good luck in the new year.
correct_sentence: The whole family will have a big get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival to get good luck in the new year.
error: family
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈family get-together〉 is redundant with the preceding 『family』, so 〈family〉 is deleted to make the sentence more concise and fluent.
error_sentence: The whole families will have a big family get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival for get good luck in the new year.
correct_sentence: The whole family will have a big get-together to eat dumplings on the eve of the Spring Festival to get good luck in the new year.
error: for
correction: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: To express purpose here, the preposition 『to』 should be used instead of 〈for〉, so 〈for〉 is changed to 『to』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: People also use red lantern decorate a house and put on new clothes.

correct_sentence: People also use red lanterns to decorate their houses and put on new clothes.

error: lantern decorate a house
correction: lanterns to decorate their houses
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: The plural form 『lanterns』 should be used here for general reference, so 〈lantern〉 is changed to 『lanterns』 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The verb 〈decorate〉 needs to be preceded by 『to』 to form an adverbial of purpose, meaning “to decorate the house”, so 『to』 is added before 〈decorate〉 to comply with grammatical rules; ③ Pronoun Error: The plural form should be used here to refer to “people's dwellings”, so 〈a house〉 is changed to 『their houses』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks,When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala.

correct_sentence: What's more, the children look forward to red envelope money, and they set off the fireworks.
error: The children are looking
correction: the children look
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Case Error: 〈The〉 is not a proper noun, nor is it at the beginning of a sentence; the first letter should be lowercase, so 〈The〉 is changed to 『the』; ② Verb Tense Error: Describing regular Spring Festival activities requires the simple present tense, so 〈are looking〉 is changed to 『look』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks,When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala.

correct_sentence: What's more, the children look forward to red envelope money, and they set off the fireworks.
error: play
correction: set off
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: To express "set off fireworks", the fixed phrase "set off fireworks" should be used, so 〈play〉 is changed to 『set off』 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks,When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala.

correct_sentence: What's more, the children look forward to red envelope money, and they set off the fireworks. When night falls, dragon and lion dances and some other activities will be held during the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV.

error: ,When the
correction: . When
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks〉 and 〈When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be separate sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 to conform to standards; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, punctuation at the end of a sentence should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so 〈,When〉 is changed to 『. When』 to conform to standards; ③ Word Redundancy Error: "Night" here refers to the period or phenomenon, not a specific night, so the definite article 〈the〉 is not needed and is deleted to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks,When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala.

correct_sentence: When night falls, dragon and lion dances and some other activities will be held during the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV.

error: dance
correction: dances
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The plural form 『dances』 is needed here to indicate multiple dance activities, so 〈dance〉 is changed to 『dances』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks,When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala.

correct_sentence: When night falls, dragon and lion dances and some other activities will be held during the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV.

error: in CCTV will held in
correction: will be held during the
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically confused and semantically unclear. Considering the context, it is understood that the intended meaning is "When night falls, dragon and lion dances and some other activities will be broadcast on CCTV during the Spring Festival Gala". Therefore, 〈in CCTV will held in〉 is changed to 『will be held during the』 to make the meaning coherent and comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: What's more,The children are looking forward to red envelope money, and they play the fireworks,When the night falls,dragon and lion dance and some other activities in CCTV will held in Spring Festival gala.

correct_sentence: When night falls, dragon and lion dances and some other activities will be held during the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV.

error: gala
correction: Gala on CCTV
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, proper nouns should be capitalized; 〈Spring Festival gala〉 is a proper noun meaning "Spring Festival Gala", so 〈gala〉 needs to be changed to 『Gala』 to conform to standards; ② Other Error: The noun 『Gala』 needs the modifier 『on CCTV』 to specify the broadcasting platform, referring to the Spring Festival Gala event, so 『on CCTV』 is added after 『Gala』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: This is Chinese Spring Festval-a traditional festval.
correct_sentence: This is the Chinese Spring Festival—a traditional festival.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: This specifically refers to "the Chinese Spring Festival" and requires a definite article for modification, so 『the』 is added before 〈Chinese〉 to make the sentence more consistent with English expression habits.
error_sentence: This is Chinese Spring Festval-a traditional festval.
correct_sentence: This is the Chinese Spring Festival—a traditional festival.
error: Festval-
correction: Festival—
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that "festival" is intended, so 〈Festval〉 is a misspelling of 『Festival』; it needs to be changed to 『Festival』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Punctuation Error: The original sentence used a hyphen; an em dash should be used here to connect the appositive, so 〈-〉 is changed to 『—』 to conform to standards.
error_sentence: This is Chinese Spring Festval-a traditional festval.
correct_sentence: This is the Chinese Spring Festival—a traditional festival.
error: festval
correction: festival
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that "festival" is intended, so 〈festval〉 is a misspelling of 『festival』; it needs to be changed to 『festival』 to make the sentence coherent.