Writing prompt: My Holiday

Student essay:
I am from Chinese family.My family is very friendly.In holiday we go to visit our relatives.We made dumplings on New Year's Eve.we go to the take part in the winter camp.I know a little frends.we were get along with frends but Holidays are short . We treasure our friendship..In this holiday is Live very happilyhave a good timeenjoy yourself. I learned a lot in this winter holiday.My winter vacation has once more ended happily in this way.
I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously,because I had done so many meaningful things,moreover,I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently,this would make my life even more colourful and full of variety.

Corrected essay:
I am from a Chinese family. My family is very friendly. During the holiday, we visited our relatives. We made dumplings on New Year's Eve. We took part in the winter camp. I met a few friends, and we got along well with friends, but the holidays are short. We treasure our friendship. During this holiday, I lived very happily, had a good time and enjoyed myself. I learned a lot during this winter holiday. My winter vacation once again ended happily in this way.
I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously, because I had done so many meaningful things. Moreover, I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently. This would make our life even more colourful and full of variety.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I am from Chinese family.
correct_sentence: I am from a Chinese family.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The singular countable noun 〈family〉 needs to be preceded by the indefinite article 『a』 to refer to a specific family, so 『a』 is added before 〈Chinese〉 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: In holiday we go to visit our relatives.
correct_sentence: During the holiday, we visited our relatives.
error: In holiday we go to visit
correction: During the holiday, we visited
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: 〈In holiday〉 is grammatically inaccurate because 〈In〉 is used for a place or a general period of time, while 『During』 is more appropriate for a specific period like a holiday; the correct structure is 『During the holiday』 meaning "during the holiday period", so 〈In holiday〉 is changed to 『During the holiday』 to conform to English usage customs.; ② Punctuation Error: When the adverbial of time 『During the holiday』 is at the beginning of a sentence, a comma is usually needed between it and the main clause of the sentence, so a 『,』 is added after 〈holiday〉 to make the sentence structure clear.; ③ Verb Tense Error: According to contextual tense consistency, the verb should be in the past tense, so 〈go to visit〉 is changed to the past tense 『visited』.
error_sentence: We made dumplings on New Year's Eve.we go to the take part in the winter camp.
correct_sentence: We made dumplings on New Year's Eve. We took part in the winter camp.
error: Eve.we go to the take
correction: Eve. We took
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, punctuation at the end of a sentence should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so a space is added between 〈Eve.〉 and 〈we〉.; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, so 〈we〉 needs to be changed to 『We』 to conform to the convention.; ③ Verb Tense Error: 〈go to the take〉 is semantically confusing and logically unclear; according to contextual tense consistency, the verb should be in the past tense, so 〈go to the take〉 is changed to 『took』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I know a little frends.we were get along with frends but Holidays are short .
correct_sentence: I met a few friends, and we got along well with friends, but the holidays are short.
error: know a little frends.we were get along with frends but Holidays
correction: met a few friends, and we got along well with friends, but the holidays
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: 〈know〉 means you "are acquainted with" these friends or your relationship with them is ongoing or usual; however, if you want to express meeting your friends during a specific holiday, the past tense 『met』 should be used, so 〈know〉 is changed to 『met』.; ② Determiner Error: 〈a little〉 modifies uncountable nouns; the countable noun 〈friends〉 should be preceded by 『a few』, so 〈a little〉 is changed to 『a few』 to comply with grammatical rules.; ③ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that "friends" is intended here, so 〈frends〉 is a misspelling of 『friends』 and needs to be changed to 『friends』 to make the sentence coherent.; ④ Conjunction Error: 〈I know a little frends〉 and 〈we were get along with frends but Holidays are short〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, so 『, and』 needs to be added after 『friends』.; ⑤ Sentence Structure Error: 〈get along〉 is a fixed phrase meaning "to have a good relationship with someone"; 〈were〉 and 〈get〉 should not appear together here, and the past tense 『got along』 is needed to describe a past state, so 〈we were get along with〉 is changed to 『we got along well with』 to make the sentence structure correct.; ⑥ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that "friends" is intended here, so 〈frends〉 is a misspelling of 『friends』 and needs to be changed to 『friends』 to make the sentence coherent.; ⑦ Determiner Error: 『the holidays』 should be used here to refer to specific holidays or holidays already mentioned, so 『the』 is added after 〈but〉.; ⑧ Case Error: 〈Holidays〉 is not a proper noun and is not at the beginning of a sentence; its first letter should be lowercase, so 〈Holidays〉 is changed to 『holidays』.
error_sentence: We treasure our friendship.. In this holiday is Live very happilyhave a good timeenjoy yourself.
correct_sentence: We treasure our friendship. During this holiday, I lived very happily, had a good time and enjoyed myself.
error: ..In
correction: . During
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: Consecutive periods 〈..〉 do not conform to conventions, so 〈..〉 is changed to 『.』 to comply with writing conventions.; ② Preposition Error: 〈In this holiday〉 is grammatically inaccurate because 〈In〉 is used for a place or a general period of time, while 『During』 is more appropriate for a specific period like a holiday; the correct structure is 『During this holiday』 meaning "during this holiday period", so 〈In〉 is changed to 『During』 to conform to English usage customs.
error_sentence: In this holiday is Live very happilyhave a good timeenjoy yourself.
correct_sentence: During this holiday, I lived very happily, had a good time and enjoyed myself.
error: is Live very happilyhave
correction: , I lived very happily, had
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: When the adverbial of time 『During this holiday』 is at the beginning of a sentence, a comma is usually needed between it and the main clause of the sentence, so a 『,』 is added after 〈holiday〉 to make the sentence structure clear.; ② Sentence Structure Error: 〈is Live〉 is not a correct subject-verb structure, so 〈is Live〉 is changed to 『I lived』 to make the meaning clear.; ③ Punctuation Error: The sentence lacks a comma for separation, leading to confusing meaning, so a 『,』 is added after 〈happily〉 to connect parallel predicates.; ④ Verb Tense Error: According to contextual tense consistency, the verb should be in the past tense, so 〈have〉 is changed to 『had』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: In this holiday is Live very happilyhave a good timeenjoy yourself.
correct_sentence: During this holiday, I lived very happily, had a good time and enjoyed myself.
error: timeenjoy yourself
correction: time and enjoyed myself
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, words must be separated by spaces; in this sentence, 〈time〉 and 〈enjoy〉 are two separate words and need to be separated by a space, so a space is added after 〈time〉 to conform to conventions.; ② Conjunction Error: The conjunction 『and』 needs to be added between parallel predicates, so 『and』 is added after 〈time〉 to make the sentence structure correct.; ③ Verb Tense Error: Based on the context, the past tense should be used here, therefore change 〈enjoyed〉 to 『enjoyed』.; ④ Pronoun Error: According to subject consistency, it is clear that this refers to "I enjoyed a good time", so 〈yourself〉 is changed to 『myself』 to correctly refer to the subject and comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I learned a lot in this winter holiday.
correct_sentence: I learned a lot during this winter holiday.
error: in
correction: during
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: 〈in this winter holiday〉 is grammatically inaccurate because 〈in〉 is used for a place or a general period of time, while 『during』 is more appropriate for a specific period like a holiday; the correct structure is 『during this winter holiday』 meaning "during this winter holiday period", so 〈in〉 is changed to 『during』 to conform to English usage customs.
error_sentence: My winter vacation has once more ended happily in this way.

correct_sentence: My winter vacation once again ended happily in this way.

error: has once more
correction: once again
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈has〉 and 〈once more〉 create a tense contradiction; 『once again』 meaning "once more" should be used here, so 〈has once more〉 is changed to 『once again』 to make the expression more concise.
error_sentence: I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously,because I had done so many meaningful things,moreover,I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently,this would make my life even more colourful and full of variety.
correct_sentence: I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously, because I had done so many meaningful things. Moreover, I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently.
error: ,moreover
correction: . Moreover
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously,because I had done so many meaningful things〉 and 〈moreover,I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 and 〈moreover〉 is changed to 『Moreover』.; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, punctuation at the end of a sentence should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so 〈,moreover〉 is changed to 『. Moreover』 to conform to conventions.
error_sentence: I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously,because I had done so many meaningful things,moreover,I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently,this would make my life even more colourful and full of variety.
correct_sentence: Moreover, I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently. This would make our life even more colourful and full of variety.
error: ,this
correction: . This
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈moreover,I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently〉 and 〈this would make my life even more colourful and full of variety〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 and 〈this〉 is changed to 『This』.; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, punctuation at the end of a sentence should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so 〈,this〉 is changed to 『. This』 to conform to conventions.
error_sentence: I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously,because I had done so many meaningful things,moreover,I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently,this would make my life even more colourful and full of variety.
correct_sentence: This would make our life even more colourful and full of variety.
error: my
correction: our
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: Based on the previous mention of 〈friendship〉 and the plural subject 〈we〉, it is clear that pronoun consistency needs to be maintained here, so 〈my〉 is changed to 『our』 to emphasize commonality and universality.