Writing prompt: My Hero

Student essay:
My name is X. I come from Beijing. My hero is my father. He was born in 1951. He is kind and helpful.
My dad is a railway man. However,he loves to rest on the hammock and just do nothing. At the weekend he spends lots of time with me. He will do anything for me. He encourages me up when I am sad.What ever he does,he never gives up.I live my dad so much. He always can help me with my homework every day until I understand,so he is my hero.
I think my father is my hero. Sometime he is strict with me,and has a talk with me. I like my dad very well.

Corrected essay:
My name is X. I come from Beijing. My hero is my father. He was born in 1951. He is kind and helpful.
My dad is a railway man. However, he loves to rest on the hammock and just do nothing. At the weekend he spends lots of time with me. He will do anything for me. He encourages me when I am sad. Whatever he does, he never gives up. I love my dad so much. He always helps me with my homework every day until I understand, so he is my hero.
I think my father is my hero. Sometimes he is strict with me, and has a talk with me. I like my dad very much.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: He encourages me up when I am sad.
correct_sentence: He encourages me when I am sad.
error: up
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: According to English verb usage norms, 〈encourage〉 as a transitive verb already includes the complete meaning of 'to motivate'; adding the adverb 〈up〉 creates redundancy. The redundant component should be deleted and changed to the standard expression 『encourages me』, conforming to the grammatical structure of a verb directly followed by an object.
error_sentence: What ever he does,he never gives up.
correct_sentence: Whatever he does, he never gives up.
error: What ever
correction: Whatever
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: The compound conjunction 『Whatever』 must be written as one word in standard English. The original sentence incorrectly wrote 〈What〉 and 〈ever〉 separately; it needs to be corrected to the complete spelling 『Whatever』, conforming to English compound word writing norms.
error_sentence: I live my dad so much.
correct_sentence: I love my dad so much.
error: live
correction: love
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: Based on the contextual emotional expression, this part expresses feelings for the father; it is necessary to distinguish between the similarly spelled 〈live〉 (to reside/exist) and 『love』 (to adore). 『love』 should be used to accurately convey the emotional meaning, fitting the contextual requirement.
error_sentence: He always can help me with my homework every day until I understand,so he is my hero.

correct_sentence: He always helps me with my homework every day until I understand, so he is my hero.

error: can help
correction: helps
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: The adverb 〈always〉 already includes the continuous meaning of 'always'; adding the modal verb 〈can〉 creates redundancy. According to the principle of conciseness, the redundant 〈can〉 should be deleted, retaining the concise expression 『always helps』; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: After deleting the modal verb, the predicate verb needs to agree with the third-person singular subject 〈He〉. Therefore, the base form 〈help〉 is changed to the third-person singular form 『helps』, conforming to subject-verb agreement grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Sometime he is strict with me,and has a talk with me.
correct_sentence: Sometimes he is strict with me, and has a talk with me.
error: Sometime
correction: Sometimes
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: There is a semantic difference between 〈Sometime〉 (at some point) and 『Sometimes』 (occasionally). According to the usage of adverbs of frequency, it should be changed to 『Sometimes』 to express the meaning of 'occasionally', conforming to the norms for expressing time adverbials.
error_sentence: I like my dad very well.
correct_sentence: I like my dad very much.
error: well
correction: much
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adverb Error: Expressing degree needs to follow the fixed collocation 'like...very much'. The original sentence mistakenly used 〈well〉 to modify the emotion verb; it should be changed to the adverb of degree 『much』, forming the standard expression 『like my dad very much』, conforming to English idiomatic usage.