Writing prompt: Sharing

Student essay:
I still remember that time I share one of my mistakes with my mother. I copied one of my classmates' homework that made me feel very nervous. My mother listened to me carefully. Then she said she was angry with me, but she can help me solve this problem. She told me to do my homework by myself Ipromised. Then I did the homework again by myself. After that I was not nervous at all. This experience make me feel very happy, because it helped me solve the problem.

Corrected essay:
I still remember that time I shared one of my mistakes with my mother. I copied one of my classmates' homework, which made me feel very nervous. My mother listened to me carefully. Then she said she was angry with me, but she could help me solve this problem. She told me to do my homework by myself, and I promised. Then I did the homework again by myself. After that, I was not nervous at all. This experience made me feel very happy, because it helped me solve the problem.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I still remember that time I share one of my mistakes with my mother.
correct_sentence: I still remember that time I shared one of my mistakes with my mother.
error: share
correction: shared
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence describes a past event and should use the simple past tense, but the original sentence uses 〈share〉 in the simple present tense; therefore, 〈share〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『shared』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I copied one of my classmates' homework that made me feel very nervous.
correct_sentence: I copied one of my classmates' homework, which made me feel very nervous.
error: that
correction: , which
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Relative Word Error: According to English grammar rules, when a non-restrictive relative clause modifies the entire main clause, 『, which』 should be used instead of 〈that〉; therefore, 〈that〉 needs to be changed to 『, which』 to comply with grammar.
error_sentence: Then she said she was angry with me, but she can help me solve this problem.
correct_sentence: Then she said she was angry with me, but she could help me solve this problem.
error: can
correction: could
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence describes a past event and should use the simple past tense, but the original sentence uses 〈can〉 in the simple present tense; therefore, 〈can〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『could』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: She told me to do my homework by myself Ipromised.
correct_sentence: She told me to do my homework by myself, and I promised.
error: Ipromised
correction: , and I promised
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence's clauses 〈She told me to do my homework by myself〉 and 〈Ipromised〉 are parallel structures and require the conjunction 『and』 to connect them; therefore, 『, and』 needs to be added to the original sentence to comply with English grammar rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it is clear that "I" is intended here, so 〈l〉 is a misspelling of 『I』, and 〈l〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to make the sentence's meaning clear; ③ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is needed between words, and the original sentence 〈Ipromised〉 lacks the necessary space; therefore, the conjoined 〈Ipromised〉 is changed to 『I promised』 to comply with English writing conventions.
error_sentence: After that I was not nervous at all.
correct_sentence: After that, I was not nervous at all.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when 〈After that〉 starts a new sentence, it needs to be followed by a comma to separate it from the rest of the sentence; therefore, 〈After that〉 is changed to 『After that,』 to comply with writing conventions.
error_sentence: This experience make me feel very happy, because it helped me solve the problem.
correct_sentence: This experience made me feel very happy, because it helped me solve the problem.
error: make
correction: made