Writing prompt: A Dinosaur Attack

Student essay:
The dinosaur attack 08.1 Lily
Long long ago. A dinosaur name Amy. She was very big, with four long legs and a large body. As the only dinosaur in the word, she was very lonely.
One day, she came to our school. She was so excited that she was bellow loudly. She stomps her feet and the world sway. When the children saw her, they were scared and ran screaming back to their class room. They were so scared that they couldn't move.
Just then a little boy still standee here, he didn't with fear in terror the dinosaur. He wanted to make friend with the dinosaur, they played swing, seesaw happily. They were so happy. When the others children saw that, they all wanted play with the dinosaurs. Finally, they played together. Now, we didn't scared dinosaur at all. On the contrary, we all played with dinosaur.

Corrected essay:
The dinosaur attacked Lily on January 8th.
Long long ago, a dinosaur was named Amy, and she was very big, with four long legs and a large body. As the only dinosaur in the world, she was very lonely.
One day, she came to our school. She was so excited that she bellowed loudly. She stomped her feet and the world swayed. When the children saw her, they were scared and ran screaming back to their classroom. They were so scared that they couldn't move.
Just then, a little boy still stood there, and he didn't feel fear and terror from the dinosaur. He wanted to make friends with the dinosaur, and they played swing and seesaw happily. They were so happy. When the other children saw that, they all wanted to play with the dinosaur. Finally, they played together. Now, we aren't scared of the dinosaur at all. On the contrary, we all played with the dinosaur.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The dinosaur attack 08.1 Lily
Long long ago.
correct_sentence: The dinosaur attacked Lily on January 8th.

error: attack 08.1 Lily
correction: attacked Lily on January 8th.
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence's logic is confused and the meaning is unclear; considering the context, it is understood that the intended meaning is 'the dinosaur attacked Lily on January 8th', therefore 〈attack 08.1 Lily〉 is changed to 『attacked Lily on January 8th.』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: The dinosaur attack 08.1 Lily
Long long ago. A dinosaur name Amy. She was very big, with four long legs and a large body.
correct_sentence: Long long ago, a dinosaur was named Amy, and she was very big, with four long legs and a large body.
error: . A dinosaur name Amy. She
correction: , a dinosaur was named Amy, and she
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence's logic is confused and the meaning is unclear; considering the context, it is understood that the intended meaning is 'a dinosaur was named Amy', therefore 〈A dinosaur name Amy〉 is changed to 『a dinosaur was named Amy』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: As the only dinosaur in the word, she was very lonely.

correct_sentence: As the only dinosaur in the world, she was very lonely.

error: word
correction: world
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is understood that the intended meaning is 'world', therefore 〈word〉 is a misspelling of 『world』, and 〈word〉 needs to be changed to 『world』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.
error_sentence: She was so excited that she was bellow loudly.
correct_sentence: She was so excited that she bellowed loudly.
error: was bellow
correction: bellowed
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: 〈was bellow〉 uses an incorrect tense and structure; this part describes a past event, so the verb needs to be in the past tense, therefore 〈was bellow〉 is changed to 『bellowed』 to conform to the contextual tense.
error_sentence: She stomps her feet and the world sway.
correct_sentence: She stomped her feet and the world swayed.
error: stomps
correction: stomped
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This part describes a past event, so the verb needs to be in the past tense, therefore 〈stomps〉 is changed to 『stomped』 to conform to the contextual tense.
error_sentence: She stomps her feet and the world sway.
correct_sentence: She stomped her feet and the world swayed.
error: sway
correction: swayed
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This part describes a past event, so the verb needs to be in the past tense, therefore 〈sway〉 is changed to 『swayed』 to conform to the contextual tense.
error_sentence: When the children saw her, they were scared and ran screaming back to their class room.
correct_sentence: When the children saw her, they were scared and ran screaming back to their classroom.
error: class room
correction: classroom
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: This part expresses 'classroom', and 〈class room〉 has an unnecessary space, therefore 〈class room〉 is changed to 『classroom』 to correctly express the meaning.
error_sentence: Just then a little boy still standee here, he didn't with fear in terror the dinosaur.
correct_sentence: Just then, a little boy still stood there, and he didn't feel fear and terror from the dinosaur.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The time adverbial 〈Just then〉 needs a comma to separate it from the main clause, therefore a 『,』 is added after 〈then〉 to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: Just then a little boy still standee here, he didn't with fear in terror the dinosaur.
correct_sentence: Just then, a little boy still stood there, and he didn't feel fear and terror from the dinosaur.
error: standee here,
correction: stood there, and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is understood that the intended meaning is 'stood', therefore 〈standee〉 is a misspelling of 『stood』, and 〈standee〉 needs to be changed to 『stood』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ② Pronoun Error: The context implies that the little boy's action occurs in a place where the speaker is not, so using 『there』 is more appropriate, therefore 〈here〉 is changed to 『there』 to correctly express the meaning; ③ Conjunction Error: 〈Just then a little boy still standee here〉 and 〈he didn't with fear in terror the dinosaur〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent clauses, therefore 『and』 is added after 『there,』 to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: Just then a little boy still standee here, he didn't with fear in terror the dinosaur.
correct_sentence: Just then, a little boy still stood there, and he didn't feel fear and terror from the dinosaur.
error: with fear in terror
correction: feel fear and terror from
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence's logic is confused and the meaning is unclear; considering the context, it is understood that the intended meaning is 'and he didn't feel fear and terror from the dinosaur', therefore 〈with fear in terror〉 is changed to 『feel fear and terror from』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: He wanted to make friend with the dinosaur, they played swing, seesaw happily.
correct_sentence: He wanted to make friends with the dinosaur, and they played swing and seesaw happily.
error: friend
correction: friends
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 『make friends』 is the correct fixed phrase, meaning 'to make friends', therefore 〈friend〉 is changed to 『friends』 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: He wanted to make friend with the dinosaur, they played swing, seesaw happily.
correct_sentence: He wanted to make friends with the dinosaur, and they played swing and seesaw happily.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: 〈He wanted to make friend with the dinosaur〉 and 〈they played swing〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent clauses, therefore 『and』 is added after 〈dinosaur,〉 to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: He wanted to make friend with the dinosaur, they played swing, seesaw happily.
correct_sentence: He wanted to make friends with the dinosaur, and they played swing and seesaw happily.
error: ,
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The parallel game items 〈swing〉 and 〈seesaw〉 need to be connected by the conjunction 『and』, therefore 〈,〉 is changed to 『and』 to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: When the others children saw that, they all wanted play with the dinosaurs.
correct_sentence: When the other children saw that, they all wanted to play with the dinosaur.
error: others
correction: other
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adjective Error: 〈others〉 is a pronoun and cannot modify a noun; the adjective 『other』 should be used to modify 〈children〉, therefore 〈others〉 is changed to 『other』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: When the others children saw that, they all wanted play with the dinosaurs.
correct_sentence: When the other children saw that, they all wanted to play with the dinosaur.
correction: to
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Other Error: The structure used here is 'want to do sth.', therefore 『to』 is added after 〈wanted〉 to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: When the others children saw that, they all wanted play with the dinosaurs.
correct_sentence: When the other children saw that, they all wanted to play with the dinosaur.
error: dinosaurs
correction: dinosaur
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The context only mentions a single dinosaur, Amy, so the singular form 『dinosaur』 is needed here, therefore 〈dinosaurs〉 is changed to 『dinosaur』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Now, we didn't scared dinosaur at all.
correct_sentence: Now, we aren't scared of the dinosaur at all.
error: did
correction: are
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: The structure 'be scared of' should be used here, meaning 'to be afraid of', therefore 〈did〉 is changed to 『are』 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: Now, we didn't scared dinosaur at all.
correct_sentence: Now, we aren't scared of the dinosaur at all.
correction: of the
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Other Error: The structure 'be scared of' should be used here, meaning 'to be afraid of', therefore 『of the』 is added after 〈scared〉 to conform to idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: On the contrary, we all played with dinosaur.
correct_sentence: On the contrary, we all played with the dinosaur.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The context only mentions a single dinosaur, Amy, so the article 『the』 is needed here to specifically refer to the previously mentioned dinosaur, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈dinosaur〉 to conform to grammatical rules.