Writing prompt: My Grandma

Student essay:
When I was a little girl, my parents found it difficult to cope with childcare and work at the same time. Therefore, my grandma began to take an active part in bringing me up. She delivered care, protection and education that person needs most in childhood. As a matter of fact, it is beneficial not only for me and my parents, but also for grandma herself.
Grandma's involvement in childcare meant I had an additional source of love and care. On my birthday, I always receive another "mystery present" from my grandma such as a new pretty sweater she wove. And whenever I have done something wrong and was punished by my father and mother, I can turn to my dearest grandma for comfort.
Grand-parenting can also ease my parents burden. When grandma gave me a night off by baby sitting, she gave the busy couple a much-needed break from the daily stress of full-time work and parenting. "Your grandma also gave useful advice to us, " mom said, "from how to change diapers to the best way to save for your college education. "
Grandma herself may also benefit a lot. It is tremendous fun for her to watch my eyes sparkle as she talking about interesting stories in family history, or what my mother was like when she was my age. She feels the life more fulfilling when she took part in my education, such as bringing me to swim, to read or to dance.
It is definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both are involved in raising me, as I get more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.

Corrected essay:
When I was a little girl, my parents found it difficult to cope with childcare and work at the same time. Therefore, my grandma began to take an active part in bringing me up. She delivered care, protection and education that a person needs most in childhood. As a matter of fact, it was beneficial not only for me and my parents, but also for grandma herself.
Grandma's involvement in childcare meant I had an additional source of love and care. On my birthday, I always received another "mystery present" from my grandma such as a new pretty sweater she wove. And whenever I had done something wrong and was punished by my father and mother, I could turn to my dearest grandma for comfort.
Grandparenting can also ease my parents' burden. When grandma gave them a night off by babysitting, she gave the busy couple a much-needed break from the daily stress of full-time work and parenting. "Your grandma also gave useful advice to us," Mom said, "from how to change diapers to the best way to save for your college education."
Grandma herself may also benefit a lot. It was tremendous fun for her to watch my eyes sparkle as she talked about interesting stories in family history, or what my mother was like when she was my age. She felt life more fulfilling when she took part in my education, such as bringing me to swim, to read, or to dance.
It was definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both were involved in raising me, as I got more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: She delivered care, protection and education that person needs most in childhood.
correct_sentence: She delivered care, protection and education that a person needs most in childhood.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: This expresses 'a person'; the singular noun 〈person〉 requires an article before it, so 『a』 is added before 〈person〉 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: As a matter of fact, it is beneficial not only for me and my parents, but also for grandma herself.

correct_sentence: As a matter of fact, it was beneficial not only for me and my parents, but also for grandma herself.

error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈is〉 is changed to 『was』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: On my birthday, I always receive another "mystery present" from my grandma such as a new pretty sweater she wove.
correct_sentence: On my birthday, I always received another "mystery present" from my grandma such as a new pretty sweater she wove.
error: receive
correction: received
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈receive〉 is changed to 『received』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: And whenever I have done something wrong and was punished by my father and mother, I can turn to my dearest grandma for comfort.

correct_sentence: And whenever I had done something wrong and was punished by my father and mother, I could turn to my dearest grandma for comfort.

error: have
correction: had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈have〉 is changed to 『had』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: And whenever I have done something wrong and was punished by my father and mother, I can turn to my dearest grandma for comfort.

correct_sentence: And whenever I had done something wrong and was punished by my father and mother, I could turn to my dearest grandma for comfort.

error: can
correction: could
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈can〉 is changed to 『could』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: Grand-parenting can also ease my parents burden.
correct_sentence: Grandparenting can also ease my parents' burden.
error: Grand-parenting
correction: Grandparenting
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'grandparenting'; thus, 〈Grand-parenting〉 is a misspelling of 『Grandparenting』 and needs to be changed to 『Grandparenting』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Grand-parenting can also ease my parents burden.
correct_sentence: Grandparenting can also ease my parents' burden.
correction: '
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Possessive Error: The possessive form should be used here to express 'parents' burden', so 『’』 is added after 〈parents〉 to correctly convey the meaning.
error_sentence: When grandma gave me a night off by baby sitting, she gave the busy couple a much-needed break from the daily stress of full-time work and parenting.
correct_sentence: When grandma gave them a night off by babysitting, she gave the busy couple a much-needed break from the daily stress of full-time work and parenting.
error: me
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: This refers to 〈my parents〉 (plural), so 〈me〉 is changed to 『them』 to maintain referential consistency.
error_sentence: When grandma gave me a night off by baby sitting, she gave the busy couple a much-needed break from the daily stress of full-time work and parenting.
correct_sentence: When grandma gave them a night off by babysitting, she gave the busy couple a much-needed break from the daily stress of full-time work and parenting.
error: baby sitting
correction: babysitting
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'babysitting'; the compound verb 『babysitting』 is correctly spelled without a space, so 〈baby sitting〉 needs to be changed to 『babysitting』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: "Your grandma also gave useful advice to us, " mom said, "from how to change diapers to the best way to save for your college education.
correct_sentence: "Your grandma also gave useful advice to us," Mom said, "from how to change diapers to the best way to save for your college education.
error: mom
correction: Mom
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: Kinship terms used as proper nouns require capitalization of the first letter, so 〈mom〉 is changed to 『Mom』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: It is tremendous fun for her to watch my eyes sparkle as she talking about interesting stories in family history, or what my mother was like when she was my age.
correct_sentence: It was tremendous fun for her to watch my eyes sparkle as she talked about interesting stories in family history, or what my mother was like when she was my age.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈is〉 is changed to 『was』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: It is tremendous fun for her to watch my eyes sparkle as she talking about interesting stories in family history, or what my mother was like when she was my age.
correct_sentence: It was tremendous fun for her to watch my eyes sparkle as she talked about interesting stories in family history, or what my mother was like when she was my age.
error: talking
correction: talked
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈talking〉 is changed to 『talked』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: She feels the life more fulfilling when she took part in my education, such as bringing me to swim, to read or to dance.

correct_sentence: She felt life more fulfilling when she took part in my education, such as bringing me to swim, to read, or to dance.

error: feels the
correction: felt
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈feels〉 is changed to 『felt』 to match the contextual tense; ② Word Redundancy Error: 〈life〉 is an uncountable noun and does not require 〈the〉 when describing life in general, so 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: She feels the life more fulfilling when she took part in my education, such as bringing me to swim, to read or to dance.

correct_sentence: She felt life more fulfilling when she took part in my education, such as bringing me to swim, to read, or to dance.

correction: ,
error_sentence: It is definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both are involved in raising me, as I get more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.
correct_sentence: It was definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both were involved in raising me, as I got more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈is〉 is changed to 『was』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: It is definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both are involved in raising me, as I get more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.
correct_sentence: It was definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both were involved in raising me, as I got more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.
error: are
correction: were
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈are〉 is changed to 『were』 to match the contextual tense.
error_sentence: It is definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both are involved in raising me, as I get more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.
correct_sentence: It was definitely the right approach that my grandma and parents both were involved in raising me, as I got more love, my parents were relieved from heavy workloads, and grandma found life more meaningful.
error: get
correction: got
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event; the verb needs to be in the past tense, so 〈get〉 is changed to 『got』 to match the contextual tense.