Writing prompt: My Dream

Student essay:
Do you have a dream? Evere one has a dream, dream can be big or small.
I have dream too my dream is I want get to a good university. Then find a good job, have a good family. What do you want to be in the future? I think i want like my father be a big boss. It if I want to have a good job be a big boss I will to study well.
My dream is very difficult, but I will try to computer the dream. Can I dream come true?

Corrected essay:
Do you have a dream? Everyone has a dream. Dreams can be big or small.
I have a dream too. My dream is to get into a good university. Then I want to find a good job and have a good family. What do you want to be in the future? I think I want to be like my father, a big boss. If I want to have a good job and be a big boss, I will study well.
My dream is very difficult, but I will try to complete the dream. Can my dream come true?

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Evere one has a dream, dream can be big or small.

correct_sentence: Everyone has a dream.
error: Evere one
correction: Everyone
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression is “everyone”, therefore 〈Evere one〉 is a misspelling of 『Everyone』, and needs to be changed to 『Everyone』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Evere one has a dream, dream can be big or small.

correct_sentence: Everyone has a dream. Dreams can be big or small.

error: , dream
correction: . Dreams
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈Evere one has a dream〉 and 〈dream can be big or small〉 contain independent subject-predicate structures and can be independent sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』, and 〈dream〉 is changed to 『Dream』; ② Noun Number Error: The plural form should be used here to refer to various different dreams, so 〈dream〉 is changed to 『Dreams』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I have dream too my dream is I want get to a good university.
correct_sentence: I have a dream too.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The countable noun 〈dream〉 needs to be modified by the indefinite article 『a』, so 『a』 is added before 〈dream〉 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I have dream too my dream is I want get to a good university.
correct_sentence: I have a dream too. My dream is to get into a good university.
error: my
correction: . My
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈I have dream too 〉 and 〈my dream is I want get to a good university〉 contain independent subject-predicate structures and can form independent sentences, therefore 〈my〉 is changed to 『. My』 to ensure proper punctuation.
error_sentence: I have dream too my dream is I want get to a good university.
correct_sentence: My dream is to get into a good university.
error: I want get to
correction: to get into
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically confused. Considering the context, the intended meaning is “my dream is to get into a good university”, so 〈I want get to〉 is changed to 『to get into』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Then find a good job, have a good family.
correct_sentence: Then I want to find a good job and have a good family.
correction: I want to
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is an imperative sentence and lacks a subject, so 『I want to』 is added after 〈Then〉 to clarify the subject and action, making the sentence complete.
error_sentence: Then find a good job, have a good family.
correct_sentence: Then I want to find a good job and have a good family.
error: ,
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The coordinate verb phrases 〈find a job〉 and 〈have a family〉 need to be connected by the conjunction 『and』, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『and』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: I think i want like my father be a big boss.
correct_sentence: I think I want to be like my father, a big boss.
error: i want
correction: I want to be
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of whether it is at the beginning or in the middle of the sentence, so 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to conventions; ② Other Error: 〈want〉 needs to be followed by the infinitive 『to be』 to express “want to be”, so 『to be』 is added after 〈want〉 to correctly express the sentence meaning.
error_sentence: I think i want like my father be a big boss.
correct_sentence: I think I want to be like my father, a big boss.
error: be
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammatical rules, appositive structures need to be separated by commas, so 〈be〉 is changed to 『,』 to introduce the appositive 〈a big boss〉, making the sentence structure clear.
error_sentence: It if I want to have a good job be a big boss I will to study well.

correct_sentence: If I want to have a good job and be a big boss, I will study well.

error: It if
correction: If
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: This is a conditional adverbial clause, the word 〈It〉 in 〈It if〉 is a redundant component, so 〈It if〉 is changed to 『If』 to make the sentence structure clear.
error_sentence: It if I want to have a good job be a big boss I will to study well.

correct_sentence: If I want to have a good job and be a big boss, I will study well.

correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: A conjunction needs to be added between the sentence components 〈have a good job〉 and 〈be a big boss〉 to connect the actions, so 『and』 is added after 〈job〉 to make the sentence meaning coherent.
error_sentence: It if I want to have a good job be a big boss I will to study well.

correct_sentence: If I want to have a good job and be a big boss, I will study well.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A comma should be used here to separate the conditional clause and the main clause, so 『,』 is added after 〈boss〉 to make the sentence meaning clear.
error_sentence: It if I want to have a good job be a big boss I will to study well.

correct_sentence: If I want to have a good job and be a big boss, I will study well.

error: to
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy: According to English grammatical rules, 〈will〉 should be followed by the base form of the verb, so 〈to〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: My dream is very difficult, but I will try to computer the dream.
correct_sentence: My dream is very difficult, but I will try to complete the dream.
error: computer
correction: complete
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended word is “complete”, therefore 〈computer〉 is a misspelling of 『complete』, and needs to be changed to 『complete』 to make the sentence coherent.
error_sentence: Can I dream come true?
correct_sentence: Can my dream come true?
error: I
correction: my
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: A possessive adjective should be used here to modify the noun 〈dream〉, so 〈I〉 is changed to 『my』 to conform to grammatical rules.