Writing prompt: Job Offers

Student essay:
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to response to your advertisement for a temporary position as a sales staff.
Usually,I like reading books and browsing imformations from Internet.I have a lively and cheerful character.
I can care about people and other things around me.And I can get along with friends and relatives.Especially,I can understand and respect other people.I have full confudince foe life.I was able to overcome the difficults and positive in my work.I love the work.I think sales staff is a right choose.I believe I can do it well.
I am look forward to hear from you.
Yours sincerely.
Han Yu

Corrected essay:
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to respond to your advertisement for a temporary position as a sales staff.
Usually, I like reading books and browsing information on the Internet. I have a lively and cheerful character.
I care about people and other things around me. And I can get along with friends and relatives. Especially, I can understand and respect other people. I have full confidence in life. I am able to overcome difficulties and stay positive in my work. I love the work. I think sales staff is the right choice. I believe I can do it well.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Han Yu

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to response to your advertisement for a temporary position as a sales staff.

correct_sentence: Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to respond to your advertisement for a temporary position as a sales staff.

error: response
correction: respond
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion: According to the context, 〈response〉 is a noun, but a verb is needed here to connect to the subsequent object; it should be changed to the verb 『respond』. Therefore, 〈response〉 needs to be modified to 『respond』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: Usually,I like reading books and browsing imformations from Internet.
correct_sentence: Usually, I like reading books and browsing information on the Internet.
error: imformations from
correction: information on the
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'information', so 〈imformations〉 is a misspelling of 『information』; 〈imformations〉 needs to be modified to 『information』 to make the sentence coherent. ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 『on』 should be used to indicate obtaining information via the internet, not 〈from〉; therefore, 〈from Internet〉 needs to be modified to 『on the Internet』 to conform to expression habits. ③ Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; in the original sentence, 〈Internet〉 specifically refers to 'the internet', so 『the』 needs to be added before 〈Internet〉 to clarify the meaning.
error_sentence: I can care about people and other things around me.
correct_sentence: I care about people and other things around me.
error: can
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy: According to the context, 『care about』 means 'to be concerned about', which itself already expresses ability or habit; in the original sentence, 〈can〉 is a redundant component, so 〈can〉 needs to be deleted to make the sentence more concise and semantically clear.
error_sentence: I have full confudince foe life.
correct_sentence: I have full confidence in life.
error: confudince foe
correction: confidence in
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'confidence', so 〈confudince〉 is a misspelling of 『confidence』; 〈confudince〉 needs to be modified to 『confidence』 to make the sentence coherent. ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 『in』 should be used to express confidence in something, not 〈foe〉; the original word 〈foe〉 is misspelled and semantically inappropriate, so 〈foe〉 needs to be modified to 『in』 to correctly express the object of confidence.
error_sentence: I was able to overcome the difficults and positive in my work.
correct_sentence: I am able to overcome difficulties and stay positive in my work.
error: was
correction: am
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing current ability should use the present tense, while 〈was〉 in the original sentence is in the simple past tense; therefore, 〈was〉 needs to be changed to the present tense 『am』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I was able to overcome the difficults and positive in my work.
correct_sentence: I am able to overcome difficulties and stay positive in my work.
error: the difficults and
correction: difficulties and stay
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the article 〈the〉 cannot be used to modify the plural noun 〈difficults〉; therefore, 〈the〉 needs to be deleted to conform to English grammar. ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'difficulties', so 〈difficults〉 is a misspelling of 『difficulties』; 〈difficults〉 needs to be modified to 『difficulties』 to make the sentence coherent. ③ Verb Choice Error: According to English grammar rules, a sentence requires a predicate; the original phrase 〈positive in my work〉 lacks a verb, so 『stay』 needs to be added to connect the subject and the adjective, forming the complete phrase 『stay positive in my work』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: I think sales staff is a right choose.
correct_sentence: I think sales staff is the right choice.
error: a right choose
correction: the right choice
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, in the original sentence, 〈right choose〉 means the correct choice, so the definite article 『the』 needs to be added before 〈right choose〉 to indicate specificity, i.e., modified to 『the right choice』, to conform to English grammar rules. ② PoS Confusion: According to the context, this means 'the correct choice'; 〈choose〉 is a verb form, whereas a noun is needed here, so it should be changed to 『choice』. Therefore, 〈choose〉 needs to be modified to 『choice』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I am look forward to hear from you.

correct_sentence: I am looking forward to hearing from you.

error: look
correction: looking
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the 'present continuous tense' is needed, generally structured as 'be doing', while 〈look〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense; therefore, 〈look〉 needs to be changed to the present participle 『looking』 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: I am look forward to hear from you.

correct_sentence: I am looking forward to hearing from you.

error: hear
correction: hearing
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, the preposition 〈to〉 (in 'look forward to') should be followed by a gerund form; the form of 〈hear〉 in the original sentence is incorrect, so the base form of the verb 〈hear〉 should be changed to 『hearing』 to conform to grammar.
error_sentence: Yours sincerely.

correct_sentence: Yours sincerely,
Han Yu
error: .
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, after the complimentary close in an English letter, a comma should be used instead of a period; therefore, 〈Yours sincerely.〉 needs to be changed to 『Yours sincerely,』 to conform to format conventions.