Writing prompt: Should High School Students Get Online Frequently?

Student essay:
Some people think that do not help parents do housework but i think we should help parents do the housework ,parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook,so we should try to help parents do more housework do not let parents involved.Parents will be very tired after work,so we help them to take some of the housework will make them feel very happy,to help parents work can also cultivate our ability. So i think teenagers should help parents do some housework.

Corrected essay:
Some people think that teenagers should not help parents do housework but I think we should help parents do the housework. Parents work hard every day and after a day go home to cook, so we should try to help parents do more housework and not let parents get involved. Parents will be very tired after work, so we help them to do some of the housework and this will make them feel very happy. To help parents with housework can also cultivate our abilities. So I think teenagers should help parents do some housework.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Some people think that do not help parents do housework
correct_sentence: Some people think that teenagers should not help parents do housework
error: do
correction: teenagers should
error_sentence: but i think we should help parents do the housework ,parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook,so we should try to help parents do more housework do not let parents involved.
correct_sentence: but I think we should help parents do the housework.
error: i
correction: I
error_sentence: but i think we should help parents do the housework ,parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook,so we should try to help parents do more housework do not let parents involved.
correct_sentence: but I think we should help parents do the housework. Parents work hard every day and after a day go home to cook, so we should try to help parents do more housework and not let parents get involved.
error: ,parents work
correction: . Parents work hard
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈but i think we should help parents do the housework〉 and 〈parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be separate sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a period at the end of a sentence should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so a space is added after 『.』 to conform to the convention; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, so 〈parents〉 needs to be changed to 『Parents』 to conform to the convention; ④ Adverb Error: The verb 〈work〉 should be modified by the adverb 〈hard〉 instead of 〈very hard〉, so 『hard』 is added after 〈work〉 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: but i think we should help parents do the housework ,parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook,so we should try to help parents do more housework do not let parents involved.
correct_sentence: Parents work hard every day and after a day go home to cook, so we should try to help parents do more housework and not let parents get involved.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The two parallel adverbials of time 〈every day〉 and “after a day” require the conjunction 『and』 to clarify the logical relationship, so 『and』 is added after 〈day〉 to complete the sentence structure.
error_sentence: but i think we should help parents do the housework ,parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook,so we should try to help parents do more housework do not let parents involved.
correct_sentence: Parents work hard every day and after a day go home to cook, so we should try to help parents do more housework and not let parents get involved.
error: very hard to
correction: day
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; 〈very hard to〉 fails to express a clear concept of time, so 〈very hard to〉 is changed to 『day』 to refer to a specific time, fitting the sentence context.
error_sentence: but i think we should help parents do the housework ,parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook,so we should try to help parents do more housework do not let parents involved.
correct_sentence: Parents work hard every day and after a day go home to cook, so we should try to help parents do more housework and not let parents get involved.
error: do
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The parallel predicates 〈do more housework〉 and 〈not let〉 need to be connected by the conjunction 『and』, so 〈do〉 is changed to 『and』 to increase logical coherence and make the meaning clearer.
error_sentence: but i think we should help parents do the housework ,parents work every day after a very hard to go home to cook,so we should try to help parents do more housework do not let parents involved.
correct_sentence: Parents work hard every day and after a day go home to cook, so we should try to help parents do more housework and not let parents get involved.
correction: get
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Other Error: The phrase 〈let parents involved〉 is missing the verb 『get』 to express the intention of parents' participation, so 『get』 is added before 〈involved〉 to complete the meaning.
error_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work,so we help them to take some of the housework will make them feel very happy,to help parents work can also cultivate our ability.
correct_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work, so we help them to do some of the housework and this will make them feel very happy.
error: take
correction: do
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: 〈take housework〉 does not conform to idiomatic English expression; the fixed phrase 『do housework』 should be used to express “doing housework”, so 〈take〉 is changed to 『do』 to meet grammatical and semantic requirements.
error_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work,so we help them to take some of the housework will make them feel very happy,to help parents work can also cultivate our ability.
correct_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work, so we help them to do some of the housework and this will make them feel very happy.
correction: and this
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: The sentence is missing the conjunction 『and』 to connect the action of helping parents and its result, so 『and』 is added after 〈housework〉 to maintain coherence; ② Pronoun Error: A pronoun is missing here to refer to the previously mentioned action, so 『this』 is added after 『and』 to maintain coherence.
error_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work,so we help them to take some of the housework will make them feel very happy,to help parents work can also cultivate our ability.
correct_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work, so we help them to do some of the housework and this will make them feel very happy. To help parents with housework can also cultivate our abilities.
error: ,to
correction: . To
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 『Parents will be very tired after work, so we help them to do some of the housework and this will make them feel very happy』 and 〈to help parents work can also cultivate our ability〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be separate sentences, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a period at the end of a sentence should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so 〈,to〉 is changed to 『. To』 to conform to the convention.
error_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work,so we help them to take some of the housework will make them feel very happy,to help parents work can also cultivate our ability.
correct_sentence: To help parents with housework can also cultivate our abilities.
error: work
correction: with housework
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: The verb phrase 〈help parents〉 should be followed by “with sth.”, using the preposition 『with』 to introduce the specific content of help, so 『with』 is added before 〈work〉 to ensure clarity; ② Noun Error: 〈work〉 fails to clearly refer to specific household chores, so 『housework』 is added after 『with』 to ensure clarity.
error_sentence: Parents will be very tired after work,so we help them to take some of the housework will make them feel very happy,to help parents work can also cultivate our ability.
correct_sentence: To help parents with housework can also cultivate our abilities.
error: ability
correction: abilities
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The abstract noun 〈ability〉 needs to be in the plural form 『abilities』 when expressing multiple abilities, so 〈ability〉 is changed to 『abilities』 to meet semantic requirements.
error_sentence: So i think teenagers should help parents do some housework.
correct_sentence: So I think teenagers should help parents do some housework.
error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 『I』 as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of whether it is at the beginning or in the middle of the sentence, so 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.