Writing prompt: Read More Books

Student essay:
Books can increase people's knowledge and expand the vision of people. Books can also improve the quality of people. Reading books is a good habit.
In my opinion, we should read more books and read good books. It can help es to know more knowledge and improve our quality. Books are good thing for us. Reading good books can make people feel relaxed. You can enjoy your happiness by reading books. I think everyone should have a good habit of reading. The world will be good in the future.

Corrected essay:
Books can increase people's knowledge and expand their vision. Books can also improve the quality of people. Reading books is a good habit.
In my opinion, we should read more books and read good books. It can help us to gain more knowledge and improve our quality. Books are a good thing for us. Reading good books can make people feel relaxed. You can enjoy your happiness by reading books. I think everyone should have a good habit of reading. The world will be good in the future.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Books can increase people's knowledge and expand the vision of people.
correct_sentence: Books can increase people's knowledge and expand their vision.
error: the vision of people
correction: their vision
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun phrase 〈the vision〉 has an unclear reference; the possessive pronoun 『their』 should be used instead of 〈the〉 to form the structure 『their vision』, making the sentence's reference clear and more concise; ② Word Redundancy: According to English expression habits, the intention here is to express 'broaden their vision'. According to the subject-verb-object structure, the verb 'expand' can be directly followed by an object component; 'their vision' can be expressed with 'possessive adjective + noun'. Therefore, the structure 〈the vision of people〉 is redundant and should be simplified to 『their vision』, which both maintains the original meaning and conforms to the principle of conciseness in English.
error_sentence: It can help es to know more knowledge and improve our quality.
correct_sentence: It can help us to gain more knowledge and improve our quality.
error: es to know
correction: us to gain
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the English personal pronoun system, 〈es〉 in the text is a clear spelling error; the correct form should be the first-person plural object pronoun 『us』, used to refer to the speaker and their related group; ② Verb Choice Error: According to semantic analysis, 〈know〉 only means 'to be aware of', while the context requires expressing the meaning of 'acquiring knowledge'. Therefore, 〈know〉 is changed to 『gain』 (to obtain), so that the verb phrase 『gain more knowledge』 more accurately reflects the process of 'knowledge acquisition'.
error_sentence: Books are good thing for us.
correct_sentence: Books are a good thing for us.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, a singular countable noun like 〈thing〉 must be preceded by a determiner; therefore, the indefinite article 『a』 needs to be added to form 『a good thing』, satisfying the grammatical completeness requirement for the noun phrase.