Writing prompt: Thanks for Parents

Student essay:
Dear parents,
at present, I'm in the college entrance examination. Suddenly, I found that my life of high school is coming to an end. At this special moment, I'd like to say something to you.
Since I was born, I have the best of care. Because of you, I have the opportunity to lead such a beautiful and colorful life. Thanks for your care, especially the year when I'm in grade three of senior high school. In these years, when I made some mistakes, instead of blaming me, you told me quantities of truth. Also, I got a lot from your teaching. In addition, don't worry me about my study. I have studied hard currently, to be honest, I made great progress. Therefore, I believe I can pass the examination with comparative ease. After the examination, due to ease your burden, I will do housework as much as I can, not only that, I'd like to make some dishes to let you taste.
In the end, I most like to say, "I love you, my dear parents. " Yours,
LiHua.

Corrected essay:
Dear parents,
At present, I'm in the college entrance examination. Suddenly, I found that my life of high school is coming to an end. At this special moment, I'd like to say something to you.
Since I was born, I have had the best of care. Because of you, I have the opportunity to lead such a beautiful and colorful life. Thanks for your care, especially the year when I'm in grade three of senior high school. In these years, when I made some mistakes, instead of blaming me, you told me quantities of truths. Also, I got a lot from your teaching. In addition, don't worry about my study. I have studied hard currently. To be honest, I made great progress. Therefore, I believe I can pass the examination with comparative ease. After the examination, to ease your burden, I will do housework as much as I can. Not only that, I'd like to make some dishes to let you taste.
In the end, I most like to say, "I love you, my dear parents."
Yours,
LiHua.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Dear parents,
at present, I'm in the college entrance examination.
correct_sentence: Dear parents,
At present, I'm in the college entrance examination.
error: at
correction: At
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, in letter format, “at present” is at the beginning of a new paragraph after “Dear parents”, and the first letter of the first word of the sentence needs to be capitalized. In the original sentence, 〈at〉 is not capitalized, which does not conform to the convention, and should be changed to 『At』 to make the sentence writing conform to English letter format requirements.
error_sentence: Since I was born, I have the best of care.
correct_sentence: Since I was born, I have had the best of care.
correction: had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, “since + simple past tense clause” means “since...”, and the main clause usually uses the present perfect tense, with the structure “have/has + past participle”. In the original sentence, “ I have the best of care”里的〈have〉未使用现在完成时结构，不符合语法规则。应在〈have〉后添加『had』，以表明从出生到现在一直持续受到最好的关怀，使句子时态符合语境要求.
error_sentence: In these years, when I made some mistakes, instead of blaming me, you told me quantities of truth.
correct_sentence: In these years, when I made some mistakes, instead of blaming me, you told me quantities of truths.
error: truth
correction: truths
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, “quantities of”意为“大量的” ,其后需接可数名词复数形式来表示多个实例 。原句中“quantities of truth”里的〈truth〉是单数形式，与“quantities of”结构不匹配 。应将〈truth〉改为复数形式『truths』，使句子在语法上正确，准确表达“告诉了我大量道理”这一语义.
error_sentence: In addition, don't worry me about my study.
correct_sentence: In addition, don't worry about my study.
error: me
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules and idiomatic expressions, “worry about” is a fixed phrase, meaning “to be anxious about...”, where 〈about〉 is a preposition directly followed by the object 〈my study〉. In the original sentence, 〈worry me about my study〉 has an extra object pronoun 〈me〉, causing word redundancy and disrupting the correct structure of “worry about”. 〈me〉 should be deleted to make the sentence expression conform to conventions.
error_sentence: I have studied hard currently, to be honest, I made great progress.
correct_sentence: I have studied hard currently. To be honest, I made great progress.
error: , to
correction: . To
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈I have studied hard currently〉 and 〈to be honest, I made great progress〉 are two independent sentences. In the original sentence, a comma is used to connect these two sentences, which is a comma splice error and does not conform to grammatical conventions. 〈, to〉 should be changed to 『. To』, using a period to separate the two independent sentences, and capitalizing the “T” in “To be honest”, to make the sentence structure clear and conform to punctuation usage conventions.
error_sentence: After the examination, due to ease your burden, I will do housework as much as I can, not only that, I'd like to make some dishes to let you taste.

correct_sentence: After the examination, to ease your burden, I will do housework as much as I can.
error: due
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, “due to” is a prepositional phrase, which needs to be followed by a noun or a noun phrase. In the original sentence 〈due to ease your burden〉, “ease” is a verb in its base form, and this usage does not conform to the structural requirements of “due to”. Here, the infinitive “to ease” is needed to express purpose. “due” is redundant in the original sentence; its removal does not affect the sentence's meaning and makes the sentence logic clearer and the expression more concise. Therefore, 〈due〉 should be deleted, so the sentence correctly expresses “To ease your burden, I will...”.
error_sentence: After the examination, due to ease your burden, I will do housework as much as I can, not only that, I'd like to make some dishes to let you taste.

correct_sentence: After the examination, to ease your burden, I will do housework as much as I can. Not only that, I'd like to make some dishes to let you taste.

error: , not
correction: . Not
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈I will do housework as much as I can〉 and 〈not only that, I'd like to make some dishes to let you taste〉 are two independent clauses. In the original sentence, they are connected by a comma, which is a comma splice error and does not conform to punctuation usage conventions. 〈, not〉 should be changed to 『. Not』, using a period to separate the two independent clauses, and capitalizing the “N” in “Not”, to make the sentence structure correct and conform to punctuation conventions.
error_sentence: In the end, I most like to say, "I love you, my dear parents. " Yours,
LiHua.
correct_sentence: "
Yours,
LiHua.
correction: 

error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Format Error: According to English letter format conventions, the closing 〈Yours〉 should start on a new line by itself. In the original sentence, 〈Yours〉 is not on a new line after the preceding text, which does not conform to the convention. A line break needs to be added after the quotation mark 〈"...parents."〉 to make 〈Yours〉 stand alone on a line, thus conforming to English letter format requirements.