Writing prompt: The Voice of China

Student essay:
Recently,a reality talent show called the Voice of China has received a lot of praises and encouragement.It's a fact that this show made a great success in this field.
The judges sit on a chair which can turn round with pushing the red botton on its arm.So this can guarantee that the judges wont't see the apperance of the singers until they turn round the chair,which means they appreciate him and want him to join their teams.That's the reason why it is so creative that almost everyone enjoys it.
The moment more than one judeg turn round,the initiative comes to the singer.The singer can choose one of the judges who are interested in him. That means the singer is succeed.
In my opinion,the highlight of the talent show is the right which is owned by not only the judges but also the singers.Obviously,it's true and fair.The apperance won't disturb the choice of judges.They just depend on the voice to estimate the singers. So it is called the Voice of China.

Corrected essay:
Recently, a reality talent show called the Voice of China has received a lot of praise and encouragement. It's a fact that this show has made a great success in this field.
The judges sit on a chair which can turn around by pushing the red button on its arm. So this can guarantee that the judges won't see the appearance of the singers until they turn around the chair, which means they appreciate them and want them to join their teams. That's the reason why it is so creative that almost everyone enjoys it.
The moment more than one judge turns around, the initiative comes to the singer. The singer can choose one of the judges who are interested in him. That means the singer is successful.
In my opinion, the highlight of the talent show is the right which is owned by not only the judges but also the singers. Obviously, it's true and fair. The appearance won't disturb the choice of judges. They just depend on the voice to estimate the singers. So it is called the Voice of China.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Recently,a reality talent show called the Voice of China has received a lot of praises and encouragement.
correct_sentence: Recently, a reality talent show called the Voice of China has received a lot of praise and encouragement.
error: praises
correction: praise
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: Based on the sentence's meaning, this refers to the abstract concept of 'praise', which is uncountable; therefore, 〈praises〉 is changed to 『praise』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: It's a fact that this show made a great success in this field.

correct_sentence: It's a fact that this show has made a great success in this field.

correction: has
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: Based on the context, this describes the continuous impact of a completed fact, which should be in the present perfect tense; therefore, 『has』 is added before the predicate verb 〈made〉 to form the present perfect tense.
error_sentence: The judges sit on a chair which can turn round with pushing the red botton on its arm.
correct_sentence: The judges sit on a chair which can turn around by pushing the red button on its arm.
error: round with
correction: around by
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'turn around', so 〈round〉 is a misspelling of 『around』 and needs to be corrected to 『around』 for clarity; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, expressing 'by pushing the button' requires the preposition 『by』 instead of 〈with〉, thus 〈round with〉 is changed to 『around by』.
error_sentence: The judges sit on a chair which can turn round with pushing the red botton on its arm.
correct_sentence: The judges sit on a chair which can turn around by pushing the red button on its arm.
error: botton
correction: button
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'button', so 〈botton〉 is a misspelling of 『button』 and needs to be corrected to 『button』 for clarity.
error_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges wont't see the apperance of the singers until they turn round the chair,which means they appreciate him and want him to join their teams.
correct_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges won't see the appearance of the singers until they turn around the chair, which means they appreciate them and want them to join their teams.
error: wont't
correction: won't
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Contraction Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it intends to express the contraction of 'will not'; 〈wont't〉 is an incorrect contraction form, the correct contraction should be 『won't』.
error_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges wont't see the apperance of the singers until they turn round the chair,which means they appreciate him and want him to join their teams.
correct_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges won't see the appearance of the singers until they turn around the chair, which means they appreciate them and want them to join their teams.
error: apperance
correction: appearance
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'appearance', so 〈apperance〉 is a misspelling of 『appearance』 and needs to be corrected to 『appearance』 for clarity.
error_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges wont't see the apperance of the singers until they turn round the chair,which means they appreciate him and want him to join their teams.
correct_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges won't see the appearance of the singers until they turn around the chair, which means they appreciate them and want them to join their teams.
error: round
correction: around
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'turn around', so 〈round〉 is a misspelling of 『around』 and needs to be corrected to 『around』 for clarity.
error_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges wont't see the apperance of the singers until they turn round the chair,which means they appreciate him and want him to join their teams.
correct_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges won't see the appearance of the singers until they turn around the chair, which means they appreciate them and want them to join their teams.
error: him
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: Based on the context, this refers to an unspecified group of singers; the gender and number of the pronoun must agree with the referent, so the singular pronoun 〈him〉 is changed to the plural 『them』.
error_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges wont't see the apperance of the singers until they turn round the chair,which means they appreciate him and want him to join their teams.
correct_sentence: So this can guarantee that the judges won't see the appearance of the singers until they turn around the chair, which means they appreciate them and want them to join their teams.
error: him
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: Based on the context, this refers to an unspecified group of singers; the gender and number of the pronoun must agree with the referent, so the singular pronoun 〈him〉 is changed to the plural 『them』.
error_sentence: The moment more than one judeg turn round,the initiative comes to the singer.
correct_sentence: The moment more than one judge turns around, the initiative comes to the singer.
error: judeg turn round
correction: judge turns around
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'judge', so 〈judeg〉 is a misspelling of 『judge』 and needs to be corrected to 『judge』 for clarity; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈more than one judge〉 is a singular concept; based on the principle of subject-verb agreement, the predicate verb also needs to be in the singular form 『turns』; ③ Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'turn around', so 〈round〉 is a misspelling of 『around』 and needs to be corrected to 『around』 for clarity.
error_sentence: That means the singer is succeed.

correct_sentence: That means the singer is successful.

error: succeed
correction: successful
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: Based on the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'that means the singer is successful' using a 'subject-copula-predicative' structure; an adjective should be used as the predicative rather than a verb, therefore 〈succeed〉 is changed to the adjective form 『successful』.
error_sentence: The apperance won't disturb the choice of judges.
correct_sentence: The appearance won't disturb the choice of judges.
error: apperance
correction: appearance
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'appearance', so 〈apperance〉 is a misspelling of 『appearance』 and needs to be corrected to 『appearance』 for clarity.