Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
Chinese Spring Festival has gone. My family were very pleased.
On the morning of the festival, we got up very early. We prepared many special things to get ready for spending the important day. We swept away the floor, cleaned the house and prepared for the dinner.
In the evening, I had a big meal together with my parents and my grandparents. After dinner, we chatted happily and played Poker. Then we watched TV for Spring Festival Gala. We stayed up very late that day to celebrate the new lunar year.
At twelve o'clock, we ate the dumplings which contained different filling and said many blessed words to relations.
What a busy and happy Spring Festival!

Corrected essay:
Chinese Spring Festival has passed. My family were very pleased.
On the morning of the festival, we got up very early. We prepared many special things to get ready for spending the important day. We swept the floor, cleaned the house and prepared for dinner.
In the evening, I had a big meal together with my parents and my grandparents. After dinner, we chatted happily and played Poker. Then we watched TV for the Spring Festival Gala. We stayed up very late that day to celebrate the new lunar year.
At twelve o'clock, we ate the dumplings which contained different fillings and said many blessed words to relatives. What a busy and happy Spring Festival!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Chinese Spring Festival has gone.
correct_sentence: Chinese Spring Festival has passed.
error: gone
correction: passed
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the intention here is to express that 'Spring Festival has ended'. 〈gone〉 usually means to leave or disappear, while here it describes the time concept of Spring Festival 'ending', so 『passed』 which is more semantically appropriate should be used. Verb choice needs to match the meaning of time passing in the context.
error_sentence: We swept away the floor, cleaned the house and prepared for the dinner.

correct_sentence: We swept the floor, cleaned the house and prepared for dinner.

error: away
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression habits, 〈away〉 in the phrasal verb 〈swept away〉 is redundant because 〈swept〉 already clearly expresses the action of sweeping. Deleting 〈away〉 makes the sentence more concise.
error_sentence: We swept away the floor, cleaned the house and prepared for the dinner.

correct_sentence: We swept the floor, cleaned the house and prepared for dinner.

error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression, 〈the〉 in 〈prepared for the dinner〉 is redundant. Here, 『dinner』 is used in a general sense and does not require an article. Deleting the determiner conforms to the usage rules for non-specific nouns in English.
error_sentence: Then we watched TV for Spring Festival Gala.
correct_sentence: Then we watched TV for the Spring Festival Gala.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈Spring Festival Gala〉 is a specific annual event and requires the determiner 『the』 for clear reference. The missing article leads to insufficient specificity of the noun.
error_sentence: At twelve o'clock, we ate the dumplings which contained different filling and said many blessed words to relations.

correct_sentence: At twelve o'clock, we ate the dumplings which contained different fillings and said many blessed words to relatives.
error: filling
correction: fillings
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈filling〉 in 〈different filling〉 should be the plural form 『fillings』, because dumplings usually contain multiple types of fillings. The plural form matches the semantic logic of 'different kinds', therefore 〈filling〉 is changed to 『fillings』.
error_sentence: At twelve o'clock, we ate the dumplings which contained different filling and said many blessed words to relations.

correct_sentence: At twelve o'clock, we ate the dumplings which contained different fillings and said many blessed words to relatives.
error: relations.

correction: relatives.
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to word meaning, 〈relations〉 emphasizes abstract interpersonal relationships, while here it refers to specific family members, so the more accurate 『relatives』, meaning 'kin', should be used. Noun choice needs to meet the specific requirements of the context.