Writing prompt: Being a Good Listener

Student essay:
Hello, everyone, I am glad to talk about being a good listener.
Listening is a good quantity that can show respect to others. As why listening can show respect is that when you listen carefully from another, you can totally understand what they say. Also, it can build a bridge between us.
There are many respects during listening.
First, we need to listen to our parents. Although sometimes they may make mistakes, they are always right. They have much more experience than us, therefore, we should listen to them. In this way, they will also listen to us. More respects they will show to us, which will make less trouble between us.
Second, teachers always listen to us, they can know more about us while listening to us, and because of this, they can help us in a right way.
Third, it is important for us to listen to each other among classmates. We can learn from each other and it can strengthen friendship.
Last but not at least, we can listen to others by asking them questions. It is necessary that we should keep quiet.
Thank you for listening.

Corrected essay:
Hello, everyone, I am glad to talk about being a good listener.
Listening is a good quality that can show respect to others. The reason why listening can show respect is that when you listen carefully to another, you can totally understand what they say. Also, it can build a bridge between us.
There are many aspects of listening.
First, we need to listen to our parents. Although sometimes they may make mistakes, they are always right. They have much more experience than us. Therefore, we should listen to them. In this way, they will also listen to us. The more respect they show to us, the less trouble there will be between us.
Second, teachers always need to listen to us. They can know more about us while listening to us, and because of this, they can help us in the right way.
Third, it is important for us to listen to each other among classmates. We can learn from each other and it can strengthen friendship.
Last but not least, we can listen to others by asking them questions. It is necessary that we should keep quiet.
Thank you for listening.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Listening is a good quantity that can show respect to others.
correct_sentence: Listening is a good quality that can show respect to others.
error: quantity
correction: quality
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the context, the intended meaning here is 'quality'. The original word 〈quantity〉 means amount, which does not fit the context emphasizing quality, therefore 〈quantity〉 needs to be changed to 『quality』 to make the meaning clearer.
error_sentence: As why listening can show respect is that when you listen carefully from another, you can totally understand what they say.
correct_sentence: The reason why listening can show respect is that when you listen carefully to another, you can totally understand what they say.
error: As
correction: The reason
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English expression habits, 『The reason why... is that...』 is a fixed sentence pattern. The original phrase 〈As why...is that...〉 does not conform to the norm and cannot introduce an explanatory sentence, therefore 〈As〉 needs to be replaced with 『The reason』 to correctly express the causal relationship.
error_sentence: As why listening can show respect is that when you listen carefully from another, you can totally understand what they say.
correct_sentence: The reason why listening can show respect is that when you listen carefully to another, you can totally understand what they say.
error: from
correction: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈listen〉 in the original sentence is an intransitive verb and needs to be paired with the preposition 〈to〉 to mean 'listen to someone', therefore 〈from〉 needs to be changed to 『to』 so that 『listen carefully to another』 conforms to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: There are many respects during listening.

correct_sentence: There are many aspects of listening.

error: respects during
correction: aspects of
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'there are many aspects'. The noun 〈respects〉 means respect, which does not fit the context emphasizing aspects of listening, therefore 〈respects during〉 needs to be changed to 『aspects of』 to correctly express the semantics.
error_sentence: They have much more experience than us, therefore, we should listen to them.
correct_sentence: They have much more experience than us. Therefore, we should listen to them.
error: , therefore
correction: . Therefore
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentences 〈They have much more experience than us〉 and 〈therefore, we should listen to them〉 have complete subject-verb structures. A comma 〈,〉 cannot be used to separate two independent sentences, therefore 〈, therefore〉 needs to be changed to 『. Therefore』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: More respects they will show to us, which will make less trouble between us.

correct_sentence: The more respect they show to us, the less trouble there will be between us.

error: More respects they will
correction: The more respect they
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to English expression habits, the comparative structure in the original sentence is incorrect. 'the more...the less...' is a fixed pattern, therefore 〈More respects they will〉 needs to be changed to 『The more respect they』 to fit the semantics; ② Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, uncountable nouns do not have plural forms. 『respect』 here is an uncountable noun and needs to be in the singular form. Thus, it is corrected to 『The more respect they』 to conform to grammar.
error_sentence: More respects they will show to us, which will make less trouble between us.

correct_sentence: The more respect they show to us, the less trouble there will be between us.

error: which will make
correction: the
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English expression habits, the comparative structure in the original sentence is incorrect. 'the more...the less...' is a fixed pattern, therefore 〈which will make〉 needs to be changed to 『the』 to fit the semantics.
error_sentence: More respects they will show to us, which will make less trouble between us.

correct_sentence: The more respect they show to us, the less trouble there will be between us.

correction: there will be
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the intended meaning here is 'there will be less trouble'. The original sentence lacks a predicate verb, therefore 『there will be』 is added to express a complete logical relationship and make the sentence structure complete.
error_sentence: Second, teachers always listen to us, they can know more about us while listening to us, and because of this, they can help us in a right way.

correct_sentence: Second, teachers always need to listen to us.
correction: need to
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the intended meaning here is 'teachers need to listen'. The logic of the original sentence is incomplete, therefore 『need to』 is added to express a complete logical relationship and make the sentence structure complete.
error_sentence: Second, teachers always listen to us, they can know more about us while listening to us, and because of this, they can help us in a right way.

correct_sentence: Second, teachers always need to listen to us. They can know more about us while listening to us, and because of this, they can help us in the right way.

error: , they
correction: . They
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentences 〈teachers always listen to us〉 and 〈they can know more about us〉 have complete subject-verb structures. A comma 〈,〉 cannot be used to separate two independent sentences, therefore 〈, they〉 needs to be changed to 『. They』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: Second, teachers always listen to us, they can know more about us while listening to us, and because of this, they can help us in a right way.

correct_sentence: They can know more about us while listening to us, and because of this, they can help us in the right way.

error: a
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to the context, this specifically refers to the correct way mentioned earlier. The definite article 『the』 needs to be added for specification, therefore 〈a〉 is changed to 『the』 to fit the semantics.
error_sentence: Last but not at least, we can listen to others by asking them questions.
correct_sentence: Last but not least, we can listen to others by asking them questions.
error: at
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression habits, 〈last but not least〉 is a fixed phrase. The original sentence redundantly adds 〈at〉, therefore 〈at〉 needs to be deleted to conform to idiomatic expression.