Writing prompt: My Life in the Future

Student essay:
What will the life of the future look like?No one knows forsure.
I will have my own family.When I become a twenty-six yearsold.I will have a work for my family.I need to care for it,
I enjoying my work,and I will do good work.After work,I like reading some book.Because I think read books is make me
feel relaxing and quiet.Another,I am also like play ping-pong.I think it can make me get health .
In the future,my life and work will be much more colorful.

Corrected essay:
What will the life of the future look like? No one knows for sure.
I will have my own family when I become twenty-six years old. I will work for my family. I need to care for it.
I enjoy my work, and I will do good work. After work, I like reading some books because I think reading books makes me feel relaxed and quiet. I also like playing ping-pong. I think it can make me healthy.
In the future, my life and work will be much more colorful.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: What will the life of the future look like?No one knows forsure.

correct_sentence: What will the life of the future look like? No one knows for sure.

error: like?No
correction: like? No
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, a space should be added after the end of an interrogative sentence to separate sentence components, making the meaning clearer. In the original sentence, there is no space between "like?" and "No"; 〈like?No〉 should be changed to 『like? No』 to comply with English punctuation rules.
error_sentence: What will the life of the future look like?No one knows forsure.

correct_sentence: No one knows for sure.

error: forsure
correction: for sure
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: In the original sentence, "forsure" is misspelled; "for sure" is a fixed phrase meaning 'indeed; certainly', and the words should be written separately. According to English writing conventions, 〈forsure〉 needs to be changed to 『for sure』 for correct expression; ② Space Error: The phrase 〈forsure〉 lacks a necessary space, not conforming to the correct written form of "for sure"; adding a space to change it to 『for sure』 separates the words and conforms to common usage.
error_sentence: I will have my own family. When I become a twenty-six yearsold.
correct_sentence: I will have my own family when I become twenty-six years old.
error: .When
correction: when
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: In the original sentence, the adverbial clause of time "When I become" should not be separated from the main clause by a period, and the capitalization of "When" is incorrect. According to English grammar rules, an adverbial clause of time should directly connect to the main clause; the period should be deleted, and 〈When〉 should be changed to lowercase 『when』 to express the sentence coherently; ② Punctuation Error: Using a period to separate the main clause and subordinate clause violates grammatical rules and disrupts sentence coherence; an appropriate conjunction should be used to connect them. Here, the period needs to be removed, and 〈when〉 should be used correctly.
error_sentence: When I become a twenty-six yearsold.
correct_sentence: I will have my own family when I become twenty-six years old.
error: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Determiner Error: In English, when expressing age, the structure "cardinal number + years old" usually does not require an article before it. In the original sentence "a twenty - six years old", 〈a〉 is redundant; according to English grammar rules, 〈a〉 should be deleted to make the expression idiomatic.
error_sentence: When I become a twenty-six yearsold.
correct_sentence: I will have my own family when I become twenty-six years old.
error: yearsold
correction: years old
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: In the original sentence, “yearsold” is misspelled; "years old" is a common compound noun for expressing age, and the words should be written separately. According to English writing conventions, 〈yearsold〉 needs to be changed to 『years old』 for correct expression; ② Space Error: The phrase 〈yearsold〉 lacks a necessary space; "years" and "old" should be separate. Adding a space to change it to 『years old』 conforms to common usage.
error_sentence: I will have a work for my family.
correct_sentence: I will work for my family.
error: have a
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: According to the context, the original sentence intends to express 'work for my family'. In the English expression "have a work", "have" (meaning 'to possess') is redundant. "Work" as an uncountable noun itself represents the concept and act of working, and does not need "have" to assist in expressing 'having a job'; 〈have a 〉 should be deleted, and 〈work for〉 should be used directly to make the expression concise and idiomatic, avoiding unnecessary wordiness.
error_sentence: I need to care for it,
I enjoying my work,and I will do good work.
correct_sentence: I need to care for it.

error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent clauses cannot be separated only by a comma; a period should be used. In the original sentence, "I need to care for it" and "I enjoying my work" are two independent clauses, and there is a comma splice error. Therefore, 〈,〉 needs to be changed to 『.』 to make the sentence structure clear and conform to conventions.
error_sentence: I need to care for it,
I enjoying my work,and I will do good work.
correct_sentence: I enjoy my work, and I will do good work.
error: enjoying
correction: enjoy
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar, in a simple present tense sentence, the predicate verb after the subject "I" should be in its base form to express a current habitual action or state. In the original sentence, "enjoying" is a present participle form, which does not conform to the rules of the simple present tense. 〈enjoying〉 needs to be changed to the base form of the verb in the simple present tense, 『enjoy』, to correctly describe the subject's action.
error_sentence: After work,I like reading some book. Because I think read books is make me
feel relaxing and quiet.
correct_sentence: After work, I like reading some books because I think reading books makes me feel relaxed and quiet.
error: book.Because
correction: books because
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: In the original sentence, "Because" immediately follows "book."; a space should be added after the period to separate sentence components and make the meaning clearer. 〈book.Because〉 needs to be changed to 『book. Because』; ② Noun Number Error: When "some" modifies a countable noun, the noun is usually in its plural form. "book" is a countable noun, and here it refers to a general sense; 〈book〉 should be changed to its plural form 『books』 to conform to grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Because I think read books is make me
feel relaxing and quiet.
correct_sentence: After work, I like reading some books because I think reading books makes me feel relaxed and quiet.
error: read books is make me
feel relaxing
correction: reading books makes me feel relaxed
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: In the clause "Because I think...", "read books" acts as the subject; the base form of a verb cannot directly be a subject. According to English grammar rules, the verb 〈read〉 needs to be changed to the gerund form 『reading』; ② Subject-verb Agreement Error: "reading books" as the subject is a singular concept, and the predicate verb needs to be in the third-person singular form. In the original sentence, “is make” is an incorrect expression; 〈is make〉 should be changed to 『makes』 to match the subject; ③ Adjective Error: "relaxing" means 'causing relaxation' and is used to describe things, whereas here it describes 'my' feeling; 〈relaxed〉, meaning 'feeling relaxed', should be used. 〈relaxing〉 needs to be changed to 『relaxed』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: Another,I am also like play ping-pong.
correct_sentence: I also like playing ping-pong.
error: Another,I am
correction: I
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: According to English grammar rules, “Another” means 'one more; an additional one'. In this sentence, it is neither a normal subject component of the sentence nor can it reasonably introduce content as a standard paragraph transition word; it has no actual semantic function and is a redundant component that should be deleted. In the original sentence, the structure 〈I am also〉 has a problem; "am" conflicts semantically with the main verb "like". In the simple present tense, the subject "I" followed directly by "like" is sufficient to express 'like'; "am" is a redundant component. Therefore, 〈Another,I am〉 should be modified to retain only the subject 『I』.
error_sentence: Another,I am also like play ping-pong.
correct_sentence: I also like playing ping-pong.
error: play
correction: playing
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: In English grammar, if the verb 〈like〉 is followed by another verb, the gerund form should be used as the object. In the original sentence "like play ping - pong", 〈play〉 is in its base form, which does not conform to grammatical rules; 〈play〉 should be changed to the gerund form 『playing』 to make the sentence structure correct.
error_sentence: I think it can make me get health .

correct_sentence: I think it can make me healthy.

error: get health
correction: healthy
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Adjective Error: According to English grammar rules, "make sb. + adjective" is a common structure used to express 'cause someone to be in a certain state'. In the original sentence, "make me get health" is not semantically coherent; "health" is a noun and cannot be directly used in this structure. Here, the adjective 〈healthy〉 should be used to express the state of 'making me healthy'; 〈get health〉 needs to be changed to 『healthy』 to make the sentence grammatically correct and semantically accurate.