Writing prompt: Movie Report: The Movie Unbroken

Student essay:
After i have watched the film,i wrote this report.
The film is talk about the World War 2.The main chereter named Louie Zamperini.He was an American soler and in one task his plane crash into the sea.He was caught by the Japanese and lead a hard.But in the end he get freedom!
When i saw this film i cried.I aslo thinked why Louie can save himself?I and he are the same just live on the Earth.He can endure the pain and stick to principles.He loved his country .he had many advantages.
I should lean them in my life.
this film let me benifit a lot!

Corrected essay:
After I watched the film, I wrote this report.
The film talks about the World War 2. The main character is named Louie Zamperini. He was an American soldier and in one task his plane crashed into the sea. He was caught by the Japanese and led a hard life. But in the end he got freedom!
When I saw this film I cried. I also thought about why Louie could save himself. He and I are the same, just living on the Earth. He could endure the pain and stick to principles. He loved his country. He had many advantages.
I should learn them in my life.
This film benefited me a lot!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: After i have watched the film,i wrote this report.

correct_sentence: After I watched the film, I wrote this report.

error: i have
correction: I
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun "I" needs to be capitalized, so 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to represent "I" to conform to English writing conventions; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past actions and events requires the use of the simple past tense of the verb, so the present perfect auxiliary verb 〈have〉 needs to be deleted to conform to the context tense.
error_sentence: After i have watched the film,i wrote this report.

correct_sentence: After I watched the film, I wrote this report.

error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun "I" needs to be capitalized, so 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to refer to "I" to conform to English writing conventions.
error_sentence: The film is talk about the World War 2.The main chereter named Louie Zamperini.
correct_sentence: The film talks about the World War 2.
error: is talk
correction: talks
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, the simple present tense of the verb is required when describing or introducing objective things. Here, the content of the movie is being introduced, and the simple present tense of the verb can be used. Therefore, the misused 〈is talk〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to the simple present tense third-person singular 『talks』 to conform to the context and English grammar rules.
error_sentence: The film is talk about the World War 2.The main chereter named Louie Zamperini.
correct_sentence: The film talks about the World War 2. The main character is named Louie Zamperini.
error: 2.The main chereter
correction: 2. The main character is
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English syntactic rules, sentences need to be separated by punctuation and spaces to avoid run-on sentence components. Therefore, a space needs to be added after 〈.〉 here; ② Spelling Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "the main character is...", and the correct spelling for the word "character" is "character", so the incorrect spelling 〈 chereter〉 needs to be changed to 『character』 to conform to word spelling conventions; ③ Sentence Structure Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "the main character's name is...", and the verb "name" needs to be in the passive voice to mean "is named...". Therefore, the predicate verb is incomplete here, and 『is』 needs to be added before 〈named〉 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: He was an American soler and in one task his plane crash into the sea.
correct_sentence: He was an American soldier and in one task his plane crashed into the sea.
error: soler
correction: soldier
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "American soldier", and the correct spelling for the word "soldier" is "soldier", so there is a spelling error here. The incorrect spelling 〈soler〉 needs to be changed to 『soldier』 to conform to word spelling conventions and the original sentence's meaning.
error_sentence: He was an American soler and in one task his plane crash into the sea.
correct_sentence: He was an American soldier and in one task his plane crashed into the sea.
error: crash
correction: crashed
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past actions and events in the movie content requires the use of the simple past tense of the verb, so there is a verb tense error here. The verb base form 〈crash〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『crashed』 to conform to the context tense.
error_sentence: He was caught by the Japanese and lead a hard.
correct_sentence: He was caught by the Japanese and led a hard life.
error: lead
correction: led
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past actions and events in the movie content requires the use of the simple past tense of the verb, so there is a verb tense error here. The verb base form 〈lead〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『led』 to conform to the context tense.
error_sentence: He was caught by the Japanese and lead a hard.
correct_sentence: He was caught by the Japanese and led a hard life.
correction: life
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "he led a hard life". The verb 〈led〉 is missing an object, leading to an incomplete sentence meaning. Therefore, there is a noun error here. The noun 『life』 "life" needs to be added after 〈hard〉 to conform to the original sentence's meaning.
error_sentence: But in the end he get freedom!

correct_sentence: But in the end he got freedom!

error: get
correction: got
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past actions and events in the movie content requires the use of the simple past tense of the verb, so there is a verb tense error here. The verb base form 〈get〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『got』 to conform to the context tense.
error_sentence: When i saw this film i cried.
correct_sentence: When I saw this film I cried.
error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun "I" needs to be capitalized, so there is a case error here. 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to refer to "I" to conform to English writing conventions.
error_sentence: When i saw this film i cried.
correct_sentence: When I saw this film I cried.
error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun "I" needs to be capitalized, so there is a case error here. 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to refer to "I" to conform to English writing conventions.
error_sentence: I aslo thinked why Louie can save himself?I and he are the same just live on the Earth.
correct_sentence: I also thought about why Louie could save himself.
error: aslo thinked
correction: also thought about
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English word spelling conventions, the correct spelling for the adverb "also" is "also", so the incorrect spelling 〈aslo〉 needs to be changed to 『also』 to conform to word spelling conventions; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past actions and events requires the use of the simple past tense of the verb, so the incorrect past tense spelling 〈thinked〉 of the verb "think" needs to be changed to 『thought』 to conform to spelling conventions and the context tense; ③ Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the intransitive verb "think" needs to be followed by the preposition "about" to form a phrasal verb meaning "think about...", so the preposition 『about』 needs to be added after 〈thought〉 to conform to grammar rules and the original sentence's meaning.
error_sentence: I aslo thinked why Louie can save himself?I and he are the same just live on the Earth.
correct_sentence: I also thought about why Louie could save himself. He and I are the same, just living on the Earth.
error: can save himself?I and he
correction: could save himself. He and I
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past actions and events requires the use of the simple past tense of the verb. Here, 〈can〉 needs to be changed to 『could』 to conform to the context tense; ② Punctuation Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, this is an object clause led by 〈why〉 after 〈about〉, and it should use a declarative tone. Therefore, 〈?〉 needs to be changed to 『.』 to conform to English syntactic rules; ③ Space Error: According to English syntactic rules, sentences need to be separated by punctuation and spaces to avoid run-on sentence components. Therefore, a space needs to be added after 〈.〉 here; ④ Word Order Error: According to English writing conventions, when the first person and third person appear together, the third person should be placed before the first person to show respect. Therefore, the word order 〈I and he〉 needs to be changed to 『He and I』.
error_sentence: I aslo thinked why Louie can save himself?I and he are the same just live on the Earth.
correct_sentence: He and I are the same, just living on the Earth.
error: just live
correction: , just living
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English syntactic rules, an adverbial participle phrase needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma and a space to avoid run-on sentence components. In the original sentence, 〈just...〉 functions as an adverbial participle phrase, so 『, 』 needs to be added before 〈just〉 to conform to English syntactic rules; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English syntactic rules, a nonfinite verb form is needed to function as an adverbial participle phrase in the sentence. An active voice adverbial participle phrase should use the "ing" form, and a passive voice adverbial participle phrase should use the "ed" form. Here, the subject 〈He and I〉 has an active voice relationship with the adverbial participle phrase "living", so 〈live〉 needs to be changed to 『living』 to conform to syntactic rules and the original sentence's meaning.
error_sentence: He can endure the pain and stick to principles.
correct_sentence: He could endure the pain and stick to principles.
error: can
correction: could
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past actions and events requires the use of the simple past tense of the verb. Therefore, there is a verb tense error here. 〈can〉 needs to be changed to 『could』 to conform to the context tense.
error_sentence: He loved his country .he had many advantages.

correct_sentence: He loved his country. He had many advantages.

error: .he
correction: . He
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English syntactic rules, sentences need to be separated by punctuation and spaces to avoid run-on sentence components. Therefore, there is a space error here. 〈.〉 needs to be changed to 『. 』 to conform to syntactic rules; ② Case Error: According to English syntactic rules, the first letter of the first word of a sentence needs to be capitalized. Therefore, 〈he〉 needs to be changed to 『He』 to conform to syntactic rules.
error_sentence: I should lean them in my life.

correct_sentence: I should learn them in my life.

error: lean
correction: learn
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "I should learn them in my life". The correct spelling for the word "learn" is "learn", so there is a spelling error here. The incorrect spelling 〈lean〉 needs to be changed to 『learn』 to conform to word spelling conventions and the original sentence's meaning.
error_sentence: this film let me benifit a lot!
correct_sentence: This film benefited me a lot!
error: this film let me benifit
correction: This film benefited me
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English syntactic rules, the first letter of the first word of a sentence needs to be capitalized. Therefore, 〈this〉 needs to be changed to 『This』 to conform to syntactic rules; ② Verb Choice Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "This film benefited me a lot". The English transitive verb "benefit" can directly take "somebody" as an object to mean "to benefit someone". Therefore, there is a verb choice error here, with a redundant causative verb structure. 〈let me benefit〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense of the predicate verb "benefit", which is 『benefited』, to conform to English grammar rules, the original sentence's meaning, and the context tense.