Writing prompt: A Book Review of The Lost World

Student essay:
One of my favourite books is The Lost World, by the famous writer Arthur Conan Doyle.The story happens in London at first, but the characters start their real adventure the Amazon Rain forest, where full of mystery and danger.
It tells some breathtaking stories about a reporter named Malone, and his companions Summerlee and Challenger, the two professors.Also including a professional explorer named Lord. Four of them have different characters and different reasons for their journey. Malone is a junior reporter for the London Daily Gazette. He is so hot-head that he intends to do something crazier than giving report.Luckily, he gets a chance to do an interview on a scientific meeting, which is giving by Professor Challenger, who insists there is a lost world on the Earth.At last, Challenger decides to let Summerlee see the lost world by himself.That's how Malone gets another big chance to be famous.Lord also takes part in the group as an explorer.From then on, they are on the way to the lost world and begin the exploration.
My favourite part of the book is when the four of them stuck at the foot of the plateau.However, they need to climb up.So they have to discuss a way.Challenger finds that they can cut down a tree which grows at the edge of the cliff.Finally when they attain the top of the plateau, two villagers push the tree down and do not follow them anymore.
The Lost World is a great book.I read it for the first time when I was ten.It is not only an adventure story but also a philosophy book.Conan Doyle describes the types of dinosaurs and the unknown creatures.It shows people how they think about the magic nature world.It is full of professional knowledge of creature and science.It is even been act as an exciting and full of imagination of the adventures of exploring new things.It is still read by people all over the world and it is thought to be one of the greatest American stories.

Corrected essay:
One of my favourite books is The Lost World, by the famous writer Arthur Conan Doyle. The story happens in London at first, but the characters start their real adventure in the Amazon Rainforest, which is full of mystery and danger.
It tells some breathtaking stories about a reporter named Malone, and his companions Summerlee and Challenger, the two professors. Also, it includes a professional explorer named Lord. The four of them have different characters and different reasons for their journey. Malone is a junior reporter for the London Daily Gazette. He is so hot-headed that he intends to do something crazier than giving reports. Luckily, he gets a chance to do an interview at a scientific meeting, which is given by Professor Challenger, who insists there is a lost world on the Earth. At last, Challenger decides to let Summerlee see the lost world by himself. That's how Malone gets another big chance to be famous. Lord also takes part in the group as an explorer. From then on, they are on the way to the lost world and begin the exploration.
My favourite part of the book is when the four of them are stuck at the foot of the plateau. However, they need to climb up. So they have to discuss a way. Challenger finds that they can cut down a tree that grows at the edge of the cliff. Finally, when they attain the top of the plateau, two villagers push the tree down and do not follow them anymore.
The Lost World is a great book. I read it for the first time when I was ten. It is not only an adventure story but also a philosophy book. Conan Doyle describes the types of dinosaurs and the unknown creatures. It shows people how they think about the magical natural world. It is full of professional knowledge of creatures and science. It is even seen as an exciting and imaginative adventure of exploring new things. It is still read by people all over the world and it is thought to be one of the greatest American stories.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The story happens in London at first, but the characters start their real adventure the Amazon Rain forest, where full of mystery and danger.

correct_sentence: The story happens in London at first, but the characters start their real adventure in the Amazon Rainforest, which is full of mystery and danger.

correction: in
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 〈in〉 is used to indicate location or range; the original sentence 〈the Amazon Rain forest〉 lacks a preposition, so it needs to be changed to 『in the Amazon Rainforest』 to conform to expression habits.
error_sentence: The story happens in London at first, but the characters start their real adventure the Amazon Rain forest, where full of mystery and danger.

correct_sentence: The story happens in London at first, but the characters start their real adventure in the Amazon Rainforest, which is full of mystery and danger.

error: Rain forest, where
correction: Rainforest, which is
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions and sentence meaning, this place means “rainforest”, so 〈Rain forest〉 needs to be changed to 『Rainforest』 to conform to writing conventions and sentence meaning; ② Relative Word Error: According to English grammar rules, non-restrictive attributive clauses require 『which』, so in the original sentence, 〈where〉 needs to be changed to 『which』, and 『is』 needs to be added to make the clause structure complete.
error_sentence: Also including a professional explorer named Lord.
correct_sentence: Also, it includes a professional explorer named Lord.
error: including
correction: , it includes
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when 〈Also〉 starts a new sentence, it needs to be separated from the following clause by a comma, so 〈Also〉 is changed to 『Also,』 to conform to writing conventions; ② Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, the original phrase 〈including...〉 is an incomplete participial phrase structure; it needs the subject 『it』 to form a complete main clause, so 〈including〉 is modified to 『Also, it includes』 to ensure sentence independence.
error_sentence: Four of them have different characters and different reasons for their journey.
correct_sentence: The four of them have different characters and different reasons for their journey.
error: Four
correction: The four
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to the context, this specifically refers to the group of four mentioned earlier; the definite article 『The』 needs to be added for specification, so 〈Four〉 is modified to 『The four』 to fit the meaning.
error_sentence: He is so hot-head that he intends to do something crazier than giving report.
correct_sentence: He is so hot-headed that he intends to do something crazier than giving reports.
error: head
correction: headed
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adjective Error: According to English grammar rules, compound adjectives need to use the past participle form as a predicative; in the original sentence, 〈hot-head〉 should be changed to an adjective form, so 〈hot-head〉 is modified to 『hot-headed』 to conform to adjective formation rules.
error_sentence: He is so hot-head that he intends to do something crazier than giving report.
correct_sentence: He is so hot-headed that he intends to do something crazier than giving reports.
error: report
correction: reports
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈report〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『reports』 to express a general concept, so 〈report〉 is modified to 『reports』 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: Luckily, he gets a chance to do an interview on a scientific meeting, which is giving by Professor Challenger, who insists there is a lost world on the Earth.
correct_sentence: Luckily, he gets a chance to do an interview at a scientific meeting, which is given by Professor Challenger, who insists there is a lost world on the Earth.
error: on
correction: at
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 〈on〉 is used to indicate position; the original sentence means “at the meeting”, so 〈on a meeting〉 needs to be changed to 『at a meeting』 to fit the sentence meaning.
error_sentence: Luckily, he gets a chance to do an interview on a scientific meeting, which is giving by Professor Challenger, who insists there is a lost world on the Earth.
correct_sentence: Luckily, he gets a chance to do an interview at a scientific meeting, which is given by Professor Challenger, who insists there is a lost world on the Earth.
error: giving
correction: given
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Voice Error: According to the context, this means “the meeting is hosted by the professor”; the passive voice should be used. The original 〈giving〉 is a present participle, which does not fit the voice, so 〈giving〉 needs to be changed to 『given』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: My favourite part of the book is when the four of them stuck at the foot of the plateau.
correct_sentence: My favourite part of the book is when the four of them are stuck at the foot of the plateau.
correction: are
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English grammar rules, a sentence requires a predicate; the original phrase 〈four of them stuck〉 lacks a verb, so 『are』 needs to be added to connect the subject and the noun, forming the complete 『four of them are stuck』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: Challenger finds that they can cut down a tree which grows at the edge of the cliff.
correct_sentence: Challenger finds that they can cut down a tree that grows at the edge of the cliff.
error: which
correction: that
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Relative Word Error: According to English grammar rules, in restrictive attributive clauses, when the antecedent is modified by determiners like 〈the only〉, 『that』 should be used instead of 〈which〉, so 〈which〉 needs to be changed to 『that』 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: Finally when they attain the top of the plateau, two villagers push the tree down and do not follow them anymore.

correct_sentence: Finally, when they attain the top of the plateau, two villagers push the tree down and do not follow them anymore.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, when 〈Finally〉 introduces a time adverbial, it needs to be connected to the main clause with a comma, so in the original sentence, 〈Finally when〉 needs to be changed to 『Finally, when』 to conform to grammar.
error_sentence: It shows people how they think about the magic nature world.
correct_sentence: It shows people how they think about the magical natural world.
error: magic nature
correction: magical natural
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, this means “magical natural world”; in the original sentence, 〈magic nature〉 are nouns, which do not fit the context, so 〈magic nature〉 needs to be changed to the double adjective modifier 『magical natural』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: It is full of professional knowledge of creature and science.
correct_sentence: It is full of professional knowledge of creatures and science.
error: creature
correction: creatures
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, the plural form of the noun should be used here, so 〈creature〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『creatures』 to represent “multiple types of creatures” to conform to English grammar.
error_sentence: It is even been act as an exciting and full of imagination of the adventures of exploring new things.
correct_sentence: It is even seen as an exciting and imaginative adventure of exploring new things.
error: been act
correction: seen
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means “is regarded as”; in the original sentence, 〈been act〉 does not fit the meaning, so 〈been act as〉 needs to be changed to 『seen as』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: It is even been act as an exciting and full of imagination of the adventures of exploring new things.
correct_sentence: It is even seen as an exciting and imaginative adventure of exploring new things.
error: full of imagination of the adventures
correction: imaginative adventure
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to the context, 『imaginative adventure』 directly expresses “imaginative adventure”; in the original sentence, 〈full of imagination〉 can be simplified to the adjective 『imaginative』 to make the sentence more concise and semantically clear; ② Noun Number Error: According to English expression habits, when 『adventure』 is used as an uncountable noun, it means “the excitement of adventure”; the original sentence means “the adventure of exploring new things” and should not be plural, so 〈adventures〉 is modified to 『adventure』 to make the expression concise and accurate.