Writing prompt: Students' Cheating in Exams

Student essay:
I am Wangtao who is a senior student.I want to show my opinions about the problem whether we should own the phone.
I think that the phone has its advantages.For example ,it's convenient for us to connect with our parents .What's more ,it also can increase our fun of the lives.
But everything has the two parts.So we should recognize that what are bad.The first of all,it will make the bad affection to our study. The wrong behaviours will period between the teenagers.Taste the time and money to chat or send the message.Another ,playing games even the cheating and the other questions will be also into the sights of ours.
So how can we have the attitude about the phone ?I support "Three beliefs ".The first one is that we don't use the phone during the studying.Next ,don't use it to play games.Of course ,don't cheat too .The last suggestion is that the phones so expensive that we should protect them safely.
In a word ,please display its best effects with your best.And avoid the weakness.

Corrected essay:
I am Wang Tao who is a senior student. I want to show my opinions about the problem of whether we should own a phone.
I think that the phone has its advantages. For example, it's convenient for us to connect with our parents. What's more, it can also increase the fun in our lives.
But everything has two sides. So we should recognize what is bad about it. First of all, it will have a bad effect on our study. The wrong behaviors will spread among teenagers, wasting time and money on chatting or sending messages. Another thing is that playing games, even cheating and other issues will also come into our sight.
So what should our attitude be towards the phone? I support "Three Beliefs". The first one is that we shouldn't use the phone while studying. Next, don't use it to play games. Of course, don't cheat either. The last suggestion is that phones are so expensive that we should protect them safely.
In a word, please display its best effects with your best effort and avoid its weaknesses.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I am Wangtao who is a senior student.
correct_sentence: I am Wang Tao who is a senior student.
error: Wangtao
correction: Wang Tao
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, for two-character Chinese pinyin names, both the surname and given name's first letters need to be capitalized. Therefore, 〈Wangtao〉 needs to be changed to 『WangTao』; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is needed to separate the surname and given name, therefore 〈WangTao〉 needs to be changed to 『Wang Tao』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: I want to show my opinions about the problem whether we should own the phone.

correct_sentence: I want to show my opinions about the problem of whether we should own a phone.

correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "the problem of...", requiring the use of the fixed phrase "the problem of..." to introduce the specific issue. Therefore, the preposition 『of』 needs to be added here before 〈whether〉 to conform to the fixed phrase and the original meaning.
error_sentence: I want to show my opinions about the problem whether we should own the phone.

correct_sentence: I want to show my opinions about the problem of whether we should own a phone.

error: the
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, an indefinite article plus a singular countable noun or a plural countable noun indicates a general reference. Based on the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "whether we should own a phone," which is a general usage. Therefore, the definite article 〈the〉 needs to be changed to the indefinite article 『a』 to conform to the original meaning and grammar rules.
error_sentence: .What's more ,it also can increase our fun of the lives.

correct_sentence: For example, it's convenient for us to connect with our parents. What's more, it can also increase the fun in our lives.

error: .What
correction: . What
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English syntactic rules, clauses and independent sentences need to be separated by punctuation and a space to avoid run-on sentences. Therefore, 〈.What〉 needs to be changed to 『. What』 here to conform to syntactic rules.
error_sentence: .What's more ,it also can increase our fun of the lives.

correct_sentence: What's more, it can also increase the fun in our lives.

error: also can increase our fun of the
correction: can also increase the fun in our
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Order Error: According to English grammar rules, when expressing "also can," the adverb "also" needs to be placed after the modal verb "can," therefore the word order 〈also can〉 needs to be changed to 『can also』 here; ② Determiner Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "increase the fun in our lives," where the headword is "fun," and "in our lives" is an adverbial. Therefore, the determiner 〈our〉 before the original headword 〈fun〉 needs to be changed to 『the』, and the determiner before 〈lives〉 needs to be changed to 『our』; ③ Preposition Error: Based on the preceding modification, "in our lives" functions as an adverbial here, therefore the preposition 〈of〉 needs to be changed to 『in』 to conform to the original meaning.
error_sentence: But everything has the two parts.
correct_sentence: But everything has two sides.
error: the two parts
correction: two sides
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "everything has two sides." "Two sides" is not a specific reference, therefore the redundant definite article 〈the〉 needs to be deleted; ② Noun Error: According to English expression habits, when expressing the two sides of something, the idiomatic phrase is "two sides" not "two parts," therefore 〈parts〉 needs to be changed to 『sides』 to conform to the original meaning and English expression habits.
error_sentence: So we should recognize that what are bad. The first of all,it will make the bad affection to our study.
correct_sentence: So we should recognize what is bad about it. First of all, it will have a bad effect on our study.
error: that what are bad.The first
correction: what is bad about it. First
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, "what" can directly introduce an object clause without needing "that" as a conjunction. Therefore, the redundant conjunction 〈that〉 needs to be deleted here; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, when "what" serves as the subject of a clause, the form of the predicate verb is determined by what "what" specifically refers to. The original sentence needs a "be" verb to connect "what" and the adjective, so the third-person singular form of the "be" verb should be used. Here, 〈are〉 needs to be changed to 『is』 to conform to the principle of subject-verb agreement; ③ Sentence Structure Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "we should recognize what is bad about the phone." Therefore, 『about it』 needs to be added after 〈bad〉 to refer to the phone, making the meaning clear and the sentence structure more complete; ④ Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the fixed phrase for "first of all" is "first of all," and no determiner is needed before the ordinal number. Therefore, 〈The first〉 needs to be changed to 『First』 here to conform to English expression habits.
error_sentence: The first of all,it will make the bad affection to our study.
correct_sentence: First of all, it will have a bad effect on our study.
error: make the bad affection to
correction: have a bad effect on
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "have a bad effect on...", and the corresponding English phrase is the fixed expression "have a bad effect on...". Therefore, the verb 〈make〉 needs to be changed to 『have』 here to conform to the original meaning and the fixed expression; ② Determiner Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "have a bad effect on...", and the corresponding English phrase is the fixed expression "have a bad effect on...". Therefore, the definite article 〈the〉 needs to be changed to the indefinite article 『a』 here to conform to the original meaning and the fixed expression; ③ Noun Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "have a bad effect on...", and the corresponding English phrase is the fixed expression "have a bad effect on...". Therefore, the noun 〈affection〉 needs to be changed to 『effect』 here to conform to the original meaning and the fixed expression; ④ Preposition Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "have a bad effect on...", and the corresponding English phrase is the fixed expression "have a bad effect on...". Therefore, the preposition 〈to〉 needs to be changed to 『on』 here to conform to the original meaning and the fixed expression.
error_sentence: The wrong behaviours will period between the teenagers. Taste the time and money to chat or send the message.
correct_sentence: The wrong behaviors will spread among teenagers, wasting time and money on chatting or sending messages.
error: behaviours will period between the teenagers.Taste the
correction: behaviors will spread among teenagers, wasting
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "spread among teenagers," and the English word for the verb "spread" is "spread," therefore 〈period〉 needs to be changed to the verb 『spread』 to conform to the original meaning; ② Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the preposition "between" is used for two entities, while "among" is used for three or more. Since this refers to the group of teenagers, 〈between〉 needs to be changed to 『among』 to conform to the original meaning and grammar rules; ③ Determiner Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, this generally refers to the group of teenagers, therefore the definite article 〈the〉, which indicates specific reference, needs to be deleted; ④ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, the original phrase "wasting time and money..." is the "result" of the previous sentence, so it can be combined with the previous sentence into a complex sentence, functioning as an adverbial of result. According to grammar rules, when the verb in the adverbial of result has an active relationship with the subject of the main clause, the gerund form should be used. Therefore, 〈Taste the〉 needs to be changed to the gerund 『wasting』 to conform to the original meaning and grammar rules.
error_sentence: Taste the time and money to chat or send the message.
correct_sentence: The wrong behaviors will spread among teenagers, wasting time and money on chatting or sending messages.
error: to chat or send the message
correction: on chatting or sending messages
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the phrasal verb "waste...on..." means "to waste (time, money, energy, etc.) on...". Therefore, the preposition 〈to〉 needs to be changed to 『on』 here to conform to English expression habits; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, a preposition needs to be followed by a gerund form. Therefore, 〈chat〉 and 〈send〉 need to be changed to 『chatting』 and 『sending』 to conform to English grammar rules; ③ Noun Number Error: According to the original context, the plural form of the countable noun "message" is needed here to indicate a general reference. Therefore, 〈the message〉 needs to be changed to 『messages』 to conform to the original context.
error_sentence: Another ,playing games even the cheating and the other questions will be also into the sights of ours.

correct_sentence: Another thing is that playing games, even cheating and other issues will also come into our sight.

error: ,
correction: thing is that
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "Another thing is playing games." Therefore, the 〈,〉 after 〈Another〉 needs to be changed to 『thing is that』 to clearly refer to playing games and make the sentence structure complete.
error_sentence: Another ,playing games even the cheating and the other questions will be also into the sights of ours.

correct_sentence: Another thing is that playing games, even cheating and other issues will also come into our sight.

error: even the
correction: , even
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, the component after "even" is a further explanation of the preceding part, therefore 『, 』 needs to be added before 〈even〉 for separation to avoid run-on sentence elements; ② Determiner Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "cheating," which is a general usage. Therefore, the redundant definite article 〈the〉 should be deleted to conform to grammar rules and the original meaning.
error_sentence: Another ,playing games even the cheating and the other questions will be also into the sights of ours.

correct_sentence: Another thing is that playing games, even cheating and other issues will also come into our sight.

error: the other questions will be also into the sights of ours
correction: other issues will also come into our sight
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, "the other" refers to the second of two, while the adjective "other" means "additional, different." Therefore, the redundant 〈the〉 needs to be deleted here to conform to the original context and grammar rules; ② Noun Error: According to English vocabulary meanings, "issue" usually refers to a complex topic or point of contention that needs discussion, resolution, or attention, while "question" refers to a specific inquiry or doubt aimed at obtaining a direct answer. Therefore, 〈questions〉 should be changed to 『issues』 here to conform to the original context; ③ Verb Choice Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "come into our sight," and the fixed phrase "come into one's sight" means "to enter someone's field of vision." Therefore, 〈will be also〉 needs to be changed to 『will also come』 to conform to the original meaning and the fixed phrase; ④ Word Order Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "come into our sight," and the fixed phrase "come into one's sight" means "to enter someone's field of vision." The original possessive noun structure makes the expression redundant, therefore the word order 〈the sights of ours〉 needs to be changed to 『our sight』 to make the sentence more concise and conform to the fixed phrase.
error_sentence: So how can we have the attitude about the phone ?
correct_sentence: So what should our attitude be towards the phone?
error: how can we have the attitude about
correction: what should our attitude be towards
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to the original context, it intends to express "what attitude should we have towards the phone," and the original interrogative structure does not fit the context of expressing an attitude. The original phrase 〈how can we have the attitude〉 needs to be changed to 『what should our attitude be』 to conform to the original context; ② Preposition Error: According to English fixed phrases, "attitude to/towards" means "opinion or feeling about something," therefore the preposition 〈about〉 needs to be changed to 『towards』 to conform to the fixed phrase.
error_sentence: I support "Three beliefs ".The first one is that we don't use the phone during the studying.
correct_sentence: I support "Three Beliefs". The first one is that we shouldn't use the phone while studying.
error: beliefs ".The
correction: Beliefs". The
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Case Error: According to the original context, this refers to a specific concept, belonging to proper nouns, so the first letter of the word needs to be capitalized. 〈beliefs〉 should be changed to 『Beliefs』 to conform to English spelling conventions and the original context; ② Space Error: According to English written expression conventions, no space is needed between a punctuation mark and the preceding word, therefore the space needs to be deleted and changed to 『Beliefs"』; ③ Space Error: According to English written expression conventions, a single letter space needs to be preserved between a comma or period and the following word, therefore a space needs to be added and changed to 『. The』.
error_sentence: I support "Three beliefs ".The first one is that we don't use the phone during the studying.
correct_sentence: The first one is that we shouldn't use the phone while studying.
error: do
correction: should
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "we shouldn't use the phone while studying." Therefore, 〈do〉 needs to be changed to 『should』 to form the correct auxiliary verb negative contraction with "n't" to express "should not," conforming to the original meaning.
error_sentence: I support "Three beliefs ".The first one is that we don't use the phone during the studying.
correct_sentence: The first one is that we shouldn't use the phone while studying.
error: during the
correction: while
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the preposition "during" is usually followed by a noun to indicate a period of time, while "while" is usually followed by a gerund form to mean "during the time that...". Here, 〈studying〉 is a gerund form, therefore 〈during the〉 needs to be changed to 『while』 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: Of course ,don't cheat too .The
correct_sentence: Of course, don't cheat either. The last suggestion is that phones are so expensive that we should protect them safely.

error: too .The
correction: either. The
error_sentence: last suggestion is that the phones so expensive that we should protect them safely.

correct_sentence: The last suggestion is that phones are so expensive that we should protect them safely.

error: the phones
correction: phones are
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, this generally refers to phones, and the plural form of the countable noun should be used for general reference. Therefore, the definite article 〈the〉, which indicates specific usage, needs to be deleted; ② Sentence Structure Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "phones are expensive," and the original sentence lacks a "be" verb. 『are』 needs to be added after 〈phones〉 to make the sentence structure complete and conform to the principle of subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: In a word ,please display its best effects with your best. And avoid the weakness.
correct_sentence: In a word, please display its best effects with your best effort and avoid its weaknesses.
error: .And avoid the weakness
correction: effort and avoid its weaknesses
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "with your best effort...", requiring the use of the fixed phrase "with your best effort." 〈.〉 should be changed to 『effort 』 to make the meaning clear and the sentence structure complete; ② Case Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express "maximize strengths and avoid weaknesses as much as possible." Therefore, "and" should connect two parallel components within the same sentence and not start a new sentence. Thus, 〈And〉 needs to be changed to 『and』 to conform to the original meaning and syntactic rules; ③ Determiner Error: According to the original context, this refers to "the phone's weaknesses." The determiner 〈the〉 needs to be changed to the possessive pronoun 『its』 to maintain consistency with the preceding 〈its best effects〉, forming a symmetrical structure to conform to the original context; ④ Noun Number Error: According to the original context, the plural form of the countable noun is needed here for general reference. Therefore, the singular 〈weakness〉 needs to be changed to the plural 『weaknesses』 to conform to the original context.