Writing prompt: Stay at Home Alone

Student essay:
Before the thing I always thought alone at home is very good.Nonetheless in the end,I think parents are very important to me.
One day, my parents interim decision on a business trip,and I only alone at home.At that time,I was very excited. On Saturday,my best friend and I played outside all day.We went to see a movie, went shopping,and went to the supermarket to buy snacks and drink.After the home,I was watching TV while eating snacks.Didn't went to bed until midnight.
The second day wake up has arrived at noon.And I have a stomachache because last night I ate too many snacks.I don't know how to take medicine and how to go to the hospital.I lay in the bad until my parents come back at noon.When they went home,they took me to hospital.My mother gave me a lot of delicious food.
I think my parents are important to me.

Corrected essay:
Before, I always thought being alone at home was very good. Nonetheless, in the end, I realized my parents are very important to me.
One day, my parents made an interim decision to go on a business trip, and I was left alone at home. At that time, I was very excited. On Saturday, my best friend and I played outside all day. We went to see a movie, went shopping, and went to the supermarket to buy snacks and drinks. After coming home, I was watching TV while eating snacks. I didn't go to bed until midnight.
The second day, I woke up at noon and had a stomachache because I had eaten too many snacks the night before. I didn't know how to take medicine or go to the hospital. I lay in bed until my parents came back at noon. When they got home, they took me to the hospital. My mother gave me a lot of delicious food.
I think my parents are important to me.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Before the thing I always thought alone at home is very good.
correct_sentence: Before, I always thought being alone at home was very good.
error: the thing
correction: ,
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy: According to the context, the meaning here is 'I always thought...', the phrase 〈the thing〉 in the original sentence is redundant in this context, so 〈the thing〉 needs to be changed to 『,』 to simplify the sentence structure.
error_sentence: Before the thing I always thought alone at home is very good.
correct_sentence: Before, I always thought being alone at home was very good.
correction: being
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when a verb acts as a subject, the gerund form is required. Therefore, in the original sentence, when 〈alone〉 acts as the subject in the object clause introduced by 〈thought〉, it needs to be in the gerund form 『being alone』 to comply with grammatical rules.
error_sentence: Before the thing I always thought alone at home is very good.
correct_sentence: Before, I always thought being alone at home was very good.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence describes a past event and should use the simple past tense. The original sentence uses 〈is〉, which is the simple present tense. Therefore, 〈is〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『was』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: Nonetheless in the end,I think parents are very important to me.

correct_sentence: Nonetheless, in the end, I realized my parents are very important to me.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, when 〈Nonetheless〉 introduces a sentence, a comma is needed to separate the clause from the main clause. Therefore, 〈Nonetheless〉 needs to be changed to 『Nonetheless,』 to conform to expression habits.
error_sentence: Nonetheless in the end,I think parents are very important to me.

correct_sentence: Nonetheless, in the end, I realized my parents are very important to me.

error: think
correction: realized my
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means 'realized'. The original sentence uses 〈think〉, meaning 'believe', which does not fit the meaning. Therefore, 〈think〉 needs to be changed to 『realized』 to fit the context; ② Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence lacks a necessary determiner for 〈parents〉 to specify the object. Therefore, 『my』 needs to be added before 〈parents〉 to clarify the possessive relationship.
error_sentence: One day, my parents interim decision on a business trip,and I only alone at home.
correct_sentence: One day, my parents made an interim decision to go on a business trip, and I was left alone at home.
correction: made an
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the intention here is to express 'make a decision'. The original sentence lacks a predicate verb. Therefore, 『made an』 is added to express a complete logical relationship and make the sentence structure complete.
error_sentence: One day, my parents interim decision on a business trip,and I only alone at home.
correct_sentence: One day, my parents made an interim decision to go on a business trip, and I was left alone at home.
correction: to go
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'to go on a business trip', and an infinitive phrase should be used. The original phrase 〈decision on a business trip〉 lacks a verb. Therefore, 〈decision on a business trip〉 needs to be changed to 『decision to go on a business trip』 to express the purpose relationship and conform to the semantics.
error_sentence: One day, my parents interim decision on a business trip,and I only alone at home.
correct_sentence: One day, my parents made an interim decision to go on a business trip, and I was left alone at home.
error: only
correction: was left
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'I was left alone at home'. The original phrase 〈only alone at home〉 lacks a verb. Therefore, 〈only alone at home〉 needs to be changed to 『was left alone at home』 to conform to the semantics.
error_sentence: We went to see a movie, went shopping,and went to the supermarket to buy snacks and drink.
correct_sentence: We went to see a movie, went shopping, and went to the supermarket to buy snacks and drinks.
error: drink
correction: drinks
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈drink〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『drinks』 to refer to multiple types of beverages, to fit the context.
error_sentence: After the home,I was watching TV while eating snacks.
correct_sentence: After coming home, I was watching TV while eating snacks.
error: the
correction: coming
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'after returning home'. The original phrase 〈After the home〉 lacks a verb. Therefore, 〈After the home〉 needs to be changed to 『After coming home』 to conform to the semantics.
error_sentence: Didn't went to bed until midnight.

correct_sentence: I didn't go to bed until midnight.

error: Didn't went
correction: I didn't go
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'I didn't go to bed'. The original sentence lacks a subject. Therefore, the subject 『I』 needs to be added to make the sentence complete; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, this sentence should use the simple past tense. Therefore, 〈didn't went〉 needs to be changed to 『didn't go』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: The second day wake up has arrived at noon.
correct_sentence: The second day, I woke up at noon and had a stomachache because I had eaten too many snacks the night before.
error: wake up has arrived
correction: , I woke up
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'I woke up'. The original sentence structure is confusing. Therefore, 〈wake up has arrived〉 needs to be changed to 『, I woke up』 to conform to the semantics.
error_sentence: The second day wake up has arrived at noon. And I have a stomachache because last night I ate too many snacks.
correct_sentence: The second day, I woke up at noon and had a stomachache because I had eaten too many snacks the night before.
error: .And I have
correction: and had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, a comma and 『and』 are needed to connect coordinate clauses. Therefore, 〈.And〉 needs to be changed to 『and』 to conform to expression; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the simple past tense should be used here. Therefore, the original 〈I have〉 is changed to the past tense 『had』 to fit the tense.
error_sentence: And I have a stomachache because last night I ate too many snacks.
correct_sentence: The second day, I woke up at noon and had a stomachache because I had eaten too many snacks the night before.
error: last night I ate
correction: I had eaten
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Order Error: According to English expression habits, the time adverbial in the original sentence needs to be postposed, therefore 〈last night I ate〉 needs to be changed to 『many snacks the night before』 to conform to semantics; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the past perfect tense should be used here to indicate an action that occurred before another past action. Therefore, 〈ate〉 needs to be changed to 『had eaten』 to indicate an earlier past action.
error_sentence: And I have a stomachache because last night I ate too many snacks.
correct_sentence: The second day, I woke up at noon and had a stomachache because I had eaten too many snacks the night before.
correction: the night before
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adverb Error: According to English expression habits, in a complex past tense context, 『the night before』 should be used instead of 〈last night〉 to refer to the previous night. Therefore, 『the night before』 needs to be added at the end of the sentence to conform to semantics.
error_sentence: I don't know how to take medicine and how to go to the hospital.
correct_sentence: I didn't know how to take medicine or go to the hospital.
error: do
correction: did
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence describes a past event and should use the simple past tense. The original sentence uses 〈do〉, which is the simple present tense. Therefore, 〈do〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『did』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I don't know how to take medicine and how to go to the hospital.
correct_sentence: I didn't know how to take medicine or go to the hospital.
error: and how to
correction: or
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules and expression habits, 〈and〉 is not suitable for listing two items in a negative sentence. It needs to be changed to 『or』 to indicate the negation of both choices. Therefore, 〈and how to〉 is changed to 『or』 to conform to the context and negative expression rules.
error_sentence: I lay in the bad until my parents come back at noon.
correct_sentence: I lay in bed until my parents came back at noon.
error: the bad
correction: bed
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the intention here is to express 'bed'. Therefore, 〈the bad〉 is a misspelling of 『bed』. 〈the bad〉 needs to be changed to 『bed』 to make the sentence meaningful.
error_sentence: I lay in the bad until my parents come back at noon.
correct_sentence: I lay in bed until my parents came back at noon.
error: come
correction: came
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence describes a past event and should use the simple past tense. The original sentence uses 〈come〉, which is the simple present tense. Therefore, 〈come〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『came』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: When they went home,they took me to hospital.
correct_sentence: When they got home, they took me to the hospital.
error: went
correction: got
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means 'got home', emphasizing the state of arrival. The original phrase 〈went home〉 is not precise enough and does not fit the meaning. Therefore, 〈went〉 needs to be changed to 『got』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: When they went home,they took me to hospital.
correct_sentence: When they got home, they took me to the hospital.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity. In the original sentence, 〈hospital〉 is a countable noun and is specific here. Therefore, 『the』 needs to be added before 〈hospital〉 to clarify the meaning.