Writing prompt: An Upset Night

Student essay:
I live in a flat,so I have many neighbor. One of them vert like singing,even in the late at night.I was very angry about that
One night,I was reading a book.Suddenly,he became singing.I was very angry,but I could do nothing.So next day,I went to his home and ask him."Why did you sing yesterday evening?""Oh,sorry"he said,"I was just like singing,I don't want to disturb you in the evening.""You're welcome.Why don't you turn down the voice?""It's a good idea!Thank you so much!"
We all had a good day

Corrected essay:
I live in a flat, so I have many neighbors. One of them very much likes singing, even late at night. I was very angry about that.
One night, I was reading a book. Suddenly, he started singing. I was very angry, but I could do nothing. So next day, I went to his home and asked him, "Why did you sing yesterday evening?" "Oh, sorry," he said, "I just like singing. I don't want to disturb you in the evening." "You're welcome. Why don't you turn down the volume?" "It's a good idea! Thank you so much!"
We all had a good day.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I live in a flat,so I have many neighbor.
correct_sentence: I live in a flat, so I have many neighbors.
error: neighbor
correction: neighbors
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, the determiner 〈many〉 must be followed by a plural countable noun; therefore, the singular noun 〈neighbor〉 is changed to the plural noun 『neighbors』 to maintain number agreement.
error_sentence: One of them vert like singing,even in the late at night.
correct_sentence: One of them very much likes singing, even late at night.
error: vert like
correction: very much likes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Adverb Error: According to English grammar rules, the adverb of degree 〈very〉 cannot directly modify the verb 〈like〉; it should be replaced with the adverb 『really』 to correctly modify the verb 『like』; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English subject-verb agreement principles, the subject 〈One of them〉 is in the third-person singular form, so the predicate verb needs to use the singular form 『likes』 to replace 〈like〉 to maintain grammatical consistency.
error_sentence: One of them vert like singing,even in the late at night.
correct_sentence: One of them very much likes singing, even late at night.
error: in the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: According to English fixed collocation rules, 〈in the〉 in 〈in the late at night〉 is a redundant component; it is deleted and changed to 『late at night』 to make the expression more concise and natural.
error_sentence: I was very angry about that
One night,I was reading a book.
correct_sentence: I was very angry about that.

correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation norms, an independent sentence 〈I was very angry about that〉 should be followed by a period, not a comma, to correctly separate sentences; the original sentence is changed to 『I was very angry about that.』.
error_sentence: Suddenly,he became singing.
correct_sentence: Suddenly, he started singing.
error: became
correction: started
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English expression habits, 〈became singing〉 does not conform to verb collocation rules; it should be changed to 『started singing』 to accurately express the action of 'starting to sing', making the meaning precise.
error_sentence: So next day,I went to his home and ask him. "Why did you sing yesterday evening?""Oh,sorry"he said,"I was just like singing,I don't want to disturb you in the evening.
correct_sentence: So next day, I went to his home and asked him, "Why did you sing yesterday evening?"
error: ask him."Why
correction: asked him, "Why
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to contextual tense consistency, the sentence is in the past tense, so the base form of the verb 〈ask〉 needs to be changed to the past tense 『asked』 to maintain correct tense; ② Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, a comma, not a period, should be used before direct speech; therefore, 〈. "Why〉 is changed to 『, "Why』 to conform to norms.
error_sentence: "Why did you sing yesterday evening?""Oh,sorry"he said,"I was just like singing,I don't want to disturb you in the evening.
correct_sentence: So next day, I went to his home and asked him, "Why did you sing yesterday evening?" "Oh, sorry," he said, "I just like singing.
error: evening?""Oh,sorry"he said,"I was
correction: evening?" "Oh, sorry," he said, "I
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing norms, a space needs to be kept between quotation marks and adjacent words; therefore, 〈evening?""Oh,sorry"he said,"I was〉 is changed to 『evening?" "Oh, sorry," he said, "I』 to ensure clear dialogue format; ② Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, an interrupting phrase within direct speech needs to be set off by commas; therefore, 〈"Oh,sorry"he said〉 is changed to 『"Oh, sorry," he said』 to make the sentence structure correct; ③ Word Redundancy: According to English grammar rules, 〈was〉 in 〈was just like singing〉 as a predicate verb forms a redundant expression with 〈singing〉; 〈was〉 should be deleted and changed to 『just like singing』 to make the sentence concise and natural.
error_sentence: "Why did you sing yesterday evening?""Oh,sorry"he said,"I was just like singing,I don't want to disturb you in the evening.
correct_sentence: "Oh, sorry," he said, "I just like singing.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a comma cannot connect two independent clauses; therefore, 〈singing, I don't want〉 is changed to 『singing. I don't want』, using a period to separate them to avoid a run-on sentence error.
error_sentence: ""You're welcome.
correct_sentence: I don't want to disturb you in the evening." "You're welcome.
error: ""You're
correction: " "You're
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing norms, a space needs to be kept between the quotation marks of different speakers; therefore, 〈""You're〉 is changed to 『" "You're』 to ensure normative dialogue format.
error_sentence: Why don't you turn down the voice?""It's a good idea!Thank you so much!
correct_sentence: Why don't you turn down the volume?" "It's a good idea!
error: voice?""It
correction: volume?" "It
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, 〈voice〉 refers to a person's vocal sound, whereas here the concept of 'volume' should be expressed; therefore, 〈voice〉 is changed to 『volume』 to make the meaning more accurate; ② Space Error: According to English writing norms, a space needs to be kept between the quotation marks of different speakers; therefore, 〈voice?""It〉 is changed to 『volume?" "It』, adding a space to ensure normative dialogue format.
error_sentence: Why don't you turn down the voice?""It's a good idea!Thank you so much!
correct_sentence: "It's a good idea! Thank you so much!
error: idea!Thank
correction: idea! Thank
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing norms, a space needs to be added between an exclamation mark and the subsequent word; therefore, 〈!Thank〉 is changed to 『! Thank』 to make the format conform to norms.
error_sentence: "
We all had a good day
correct_sentence: "
We all had a good day.
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a sentence needs to end with a period; therefore, a period is added at the end of the sentence 『We all had a good day.』 to make the sentence structure complete.