Writing prompt: Housework

Student essay:
Teenagers should help their parents do housework. Every family has a lot of housework and everyone should learn to do something. As members of family,we need to do something for our family. Parents are responsible for the family events and they also make money so we should do household chores.
I often sweep the floor,block and wash the dishes. I think teenagers should do homework because it can effectively share for the parents,do not let parents worry about us and tell parents we grow up by action.
I think doing housework not only make the home clean,but also can create a clean environment,make parents happy and be proud of us.
Because of this,I am going to do plenty of small things during the winter holiday and making parents proud of me.

Corrected essay:
Teenagers should help their parents do housework. Every family has a lot of housework and everyone should learn to do something. As members of a family, we need to do something for our family. Parents are responsible for the family events and they also make money so we should do household chores.
I often sweep the floor, mop and wash the dishes. I think teenagers should do housework because it can effectively help share the household chores with parents, not let parents worry about us and show parents we are growing up through our actions.
I think doing housework not only makes the home clean, but also can create a clean environment, makes parents happy and makes them proud of us. Because of this, I am going to do plenty of small things during the winter holiday to make my parents proud of me.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: As members of family,we need to do something for our family.
correct_sentence: As members of a family, we need to do something for our family.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the indefinite article 『a』 is needed before the generic singular countable noun 〈family〉 to indicate singularity, so 〈family〉 is changed to 『a family』 to conform to expression habits.
error_sentence: I often sweep the floor,block and wash the dishes.
correct_sentence: I often sweep the floor, mop and wash the dishes.
error: block
correction: mop
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'to mop the floor', 〈block〉 means 'to obstruct', which is unrelated to cleaning the floor, therefore 〈block〉 needs to be changed to 『mop』 to fit the semantics and context.
error_sentence: I think teenagers should do homework because it can effectively share for the parents,do not let parents worry about us and tell parents we grow up by action.

correct_sentence: I think teenagers should do housework because it can effectively help share the household chores with parents, not let parents worry about us and show parents we are growing up through our actions.

error: homework
correction: housework
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the context, the sentence here means 'housework', 〈homework〉 means 'school assignments', which does not fit the context, therefore 〈homework〉 needs to be changed to 『housework』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I think teenagers should do homework because it can effectively share for the parents,do not let parents worry about us and tell parents we grow up by action.

correct_sentence: I think teenagers should do housework because it can effectively help share the household chores with parents, not let parents worry about us and show parents we are growing up through our actions.

error: share for the
correction: help share the household chores with
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the original phrase 〈share for〉 does not fit the semantic collocation of 'to share (duties)', it should be changed to 『help share』 to fit the semantics; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, 'to share with parents' should use the preposition 『with』 instead of 〈for〉, therefore 〈share for the〉 needs to be changed to 『help share the household chores with』 to conform to grammatical rules; ③ Noun Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'to share household chores', the original sentence lacks a noun, therefore 『household chores』 needs to be added to clarify the specific content being shared.
error_sentence: I think teenagers should do homework because it can effectively share for the parents,do not let parents worry about us and tell parents we grow up by action.

correct_sentence: I think teenagers should do housework because it can effectively help share the household chores with parents, not let parents worry about us and show parents we are growing up through our actions.

error: do
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the context, the 〈do〉 in 〈do not let〉 is redundant in the parallel structure 〈not let...and show...〉, therefore the redundant 〈do〉 needs to be deleted to make the sentence more concise and fluent.
error_sentence: I think teenagers should do homework because it can effectively share for the parents,do not let parents worry about us and tell parents we grow up by action.

correct_sentence: I think teenagers should do housework because it can effectively help share the household chores with parents, not let parents worry about us and show parents we are growing up through our actions.

error: tell
correction: show
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means 'to show', in the original sentence 〈tell〉 means 'to inform', which does not fit the meaning, therefore 〈tell〉 needs to be changed to 『show』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: I think teenagers should do homework because it can effectively share for the parents,do not let parents worry about us and tell parents we grow up by action.

correct_sentence: I think teenagers should do housework because it can effectively help share the household chores with parents, not let parents worry about us and show parents we are growing up through our actions.

error: grow up by action
correction: are growing up through our actions
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the context, growth is a continuous process, requiring the progressive tense, therefore 〈grow〉 needs to be changed to 『are growing』 to fit the tense; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the mode of expression should use 『through』 instead of 〈by〉, therefore 〈by〉 needs to be changed to 『through』 to conform to expression habits; ③ Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, abstract actions need to be concretized as 『actions』, therefore 〈action〉 needs to be changed to 『our actions』 to conform to idiomatic expressions and grammar rules.
error_sentence: I think doing housework not only make the home clean,but also can create a clean environment,make parents happy and be proud of us.

correct_sentence: I think doing housework not only makes the home clean, but also can create a clean environment, makes parents happy and makes them proud of us.
error: make
correction: makes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error, the subject 〈doing housework〉 is singular, the original predicate 〈make〉 is in plural form, therefore the verb 〈make〉 needs to be changed to the singular form 『makes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: I think doing housework not only make the home clean,but also can create a clean environment,make parents happy and be proud of us.

correct_sentence: I think doing housework not only makes the home clean, but also can create a clean environment, makes parents happy and makes them proud of us.
error: make
correction: makes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error, the subject 〈doing housework〉 is singular, the original predicate 〈make〉 is in plural form, therefore the verb 〈make〉 needs to be changed to the singular form 『makes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: I think doing housework not only make the home clean,but also can create a clean environment,make parents happy and be proud of us.

correct_sentence: I think doing housework not only makes the home clean, but also can create a clean environment, makes parents happy and makes them proud of us.
error: be
correction: makes them
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the original phrase 〈be proud of〉 lacks an agent performing the action, therefore it needs to be changed to 『makes them proud of』 to clarify the causal relationship of 'making parents proud', making the semantics clearer.
error_sentence: I think doing housework not only make the home clean,but also can create a clean environment,make parents happy and be proud of us.

correct_sentence: I think doing housework not only makes the home clean, but also can create a clean environment, makes parents happy and makes them proud of us. Because of this, I am going to do plenty of small things during the winter holiday to make my parents proud of me.
error: 

error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: Format Error: According to the context, these two paragraphs are semantically related and should not be separated by a line break, therefore they need to be merged into one sentence to standardize the article format.
error_sentence: Because of this,I am going to do plenty of small things during the winter holiday and making parents proud of me.
correct_sentence: Because of this, I am going to do plenty of small things during the winter holiday to make my parents proud of me.
error: and making
correction: to make my
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'to make my parents proud of me', an infinitive phrase should be used, the original phrase 〈and making〉 is in the wrong form, therefore 〈and making〉 needs to be changed to 『to make my』 to express a purpose relationship, in order to fit the semantics.