Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Based on the information provided about Sarah and the picture, describe her winter holiday. The beginning is provided:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule.

Student essay:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. I get up at twenty to eight. I read English texts start at half past eight. But end at a quarter to ten. I do my homework at the day time. I take execise, clean house and cook dinner in the afternoon. I watch TV or movies in after supper. I go to bed at half past nine.

Corrected essay:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. I get up at twenty to eight. I read English texts from half past eight, and end at a quarter to ten. I do my homework in the daytime. I take exercise, clean the house and cook dinner in the afternoon. I watch TV or movies after supper. I go to bed at half past nine.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I read English texts start at half past eight.
correct_sentence: I read English texts from half past eight, and end at a quarter to ten.
error: start at
correction: from
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the preposition 〈from〉 should be used to indicate the starting point of a time period, not a verb phrase, as there is already a main verb in the sentence. A sentence can only have one main verb, so 〈start at〉 needs to be changed to 『from』 to conform to English expression habits.
error_sentence: I read English texts start at half past eight. But end at a quarter to ten.
correct_sentence: I read English texts from half past eight, and end at a quarter to ten.
error: . But
correction: , and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to the sentence's meaning, there is no logical contrast between the two clauses, so 〈But〉 should be changed to 『and』 to maintain coherence; ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions and grammar rules, both the period 〈.〉 and the conjunction 『and』 can connect two clauses. When using the conjunction 『and』, the period 〈.〉 should be changed to a comma 〈,〉 to follow the correct convention.
error_sentence: I do my homework at the day time.
correct_sentence: I do my homework in the daytime.
error: at the day time
correction: in the daytime
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the preposition 〈at〉 is not suitable for indicating a period of time; 〈in〉 should be used for the context of a specific time period 〈daytime〉; ② Spelling Error: 〈day time〉 is misspelled; the correct spelling is 『daytime』, meaning 'daylight hours'.
error_sentence: I take execise, clean house and cook dinner in the afternoon.
correct_sentence: I take exercise, clean the house and cook dinner in the afternoon.
error: execise
correction: exercise
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions and the sentence's meaning, the intended word is 'exercise', so the misspelling 〈execise〉 should be corrected to 『exercise』 to follow correct spelling rules.
error_sentence: I take execise, clean house and cook dinner in the afternoon.
correct_sentence: I take exercise, clean the house and cook dinner in the afternoon.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈house〉 as a singular countable noun requires the definite article 〈the〉 for modification, so 『the』 should be added before 〈house〉 to make the sentence more standard.
error_sentence: I watch TV or movies in after supper.
correct_sentence: I watch TV or movies after supper.
error: in
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the original text and English grammar rules, the phrase 〈after supper〉 at the end of the sentence already functions as a prepositional phrase indicating time, so adding 〈in〉 is unnecessary. Therefore, the redundant 〈in〉 is removed for conciseness.