Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
高峰is a soccer fans. He has for soccers and he has many soccer stories photos, but he never play football. He only watch football game on the TV. Mike likes basketball. He doesn't like ping-pong , beacons is boring. Dave likes ssoccer . But he doesn'tlike baseball. Beeacaus is difficult.

Corrected essay:
Gao Feng is a soccer fan. He has four soccer balls and he has many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays football. He only watches football games on TV. Mike likes basketball. He doesn't like ping-pong, because it is boring. Dave likes soccer. But he doesn't like baseball. Because it is difficult.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: 高峰is a soccer fans.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng is a soccer fan.
error: 高峰is
correction: Gao Feng is
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: The proper noun 〈高峰〉 (a name) should be written in Pinyin, not Chinese characters, hence 〈高峰〉 is changed to 『Gao Feng』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Space Error: A space is required between the Pinyin name and the English word 〈is〉, so 『Gao Feng is』 is the correct format.
error_sentence: 高峰is a soccer fans.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng is a soccer fan.
error: fans
correction: fan
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: The phrase 〈a soccer〉 is singular, and requires a singular noun to match the article 〈a〉, so 〈fans〉 is changed to 『fan』.
error_sentence: He has for soccers and he has many soccer stories photos, but he never play football.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and he has many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays football.
error: for soccers
correction: four soccer balls
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, the number word 〈for〉 is misspelled as the homophone 『four』; it needs correction to the correct numeral expression meaning "four"; ② Noun Error: 〈soccers〉 is an incorrect expression and should be changed to 『soccer balls』 to denote multiple footballs.
error_sentence: He has for soccers and he has many soccer stories photos, but he never play football.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and he has many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays football.
error: stories
correction: stars'
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Error: 〈stories〉 means "stories", but the context requires "photos of stars", so it is changed to 『stars』; ② Noun Possessive Error: According to the prompt's requirement to express "photos of the stars", the possessive form is needed, hence 『stars'』.
error_sentence: He has for soccers and he has many soccer stories photos, but he never play football.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and he has many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays football.
error: play
correction: plays
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the third-person singular subject 〈he〉 requires the third-person singular verb form; 〈play〉 is changed to 『plays』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: He only watch football game on the TV.
correct_sentence: He only watches football games on TV.
error: watch football game on the
correction: watches football games on
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the subject and verb must agree; the verb 〈watch〉 should be changed to 『watches』 to agree with the subject 〈he〉; ② Noun Number Error: 〈game〉 should be changed to the plural form 『games』 to refer to multiple unspecified games; ③ Determiner Error: The fixed expression 『on TV』 does not require an article; 〈the〉 is deleted to mean "watch games on TV".
error_sentence: He doesn't like ping-pong , beacons is boring.
correct_sentence: He doesn't like ping-pong, because it is boring.
error: beacons
correction: because it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: The word 〈beacons〉 is incorrect; the intended meaning is "because", so it should be corrected to 『because』; ② Pronoun Error: 'Because' introduces an adverbial clause of reason, which lacks a subject; the pronoun 『it』 is added as the subject, referring back to 〈ping-pong〉.
error_sentence: Dave likes ssoccer .
correct_sentence: Dave likes soccer.
error: ssoccer
correction: soccer
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, the word 〈ssoccer〉 has an extra letter 〈s〉; it should be corrected to 『soccer』 for correct spelling, meaning "football".
error_sentence: But he doesn'tlike baseball.
correct_sentence: But he doesn't like baseball.
error: doesn'tlike
correction: doesn't like
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: The necessary space between the contraction 〈doesn't〉 and the verb 〈like〉 is missing; it should be corrected to 『doesn't like』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: Beeacaus is difficult.
correct_sentence: Because it is difficult.
error: Beeacaus
correction: Because it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: The word 〈Beeacaus〉 is misspelled; it should be corrected to 『because』 meaning "because"; ② Pronoun Error: 'Because' introduces an adverbial clause of reason, which lacks a subject; the pronoun 〈it〉 is added as the subject, referring back to 〈baseball〉.