Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Based on the information provided about Sarah and the picture, describe her winter holiday. The beginning is provided:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule.

Student essay:
In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday What about you?

Corrected essay:
At 7:40 am, I get up and brush my teeth. From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts. In the daytime, I do my homework. In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook food. After supper I watch TV or movies. This is my winter holiday. What about you?

Error analysis:
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: At 7:40 am, I get up and brush my teeth.
error: In the 7:40am
correction: At 7:40 am,
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈at〉 should be used for specific time points instead of 〈in〉, so 〈In〉 in the original sentence 〈In the 7:40am〉 is a preposition error and needs to be changed to 『At』; ② Determiner Error: When describing a specific time point, no determiner is needed between the preposition and the time point, so 〈the〉 in the original sentence should be deleted; ③ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is needed before the lowercase letter 『a』 in the time expression "7:40am"; the original format 〈7:40am〉 is incorrect and should be changed to 『7:40 am』 to comply with the norm.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: At 7:40 am, I get up and brush my teeth.
error: wash
correction: brush
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English usage customs, the verb 〈wash〉 is typically used for cleaning objects, while the standard verb collocation for brushing teeth is “brush teeth”; therefore, 〈wash〉 in the original sentence is a verb choice error and needs to be changed to 『brush』 to conform to English idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: At 7:40 am, I get up and brush my teeth. From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts.
error: from 8:30
correction: . From 8:30 a.m.
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, the preceding clause 〈brush my teeth〉 and the following clause 〈read English texts〉 are two independent sentences, lacking a period separator between them; a period 『.』 needs to be added; ② Noun Error: According to English expression habits, 『a.m.』 needs to be added to specify the morning period; the original format 〈8:30〉 is incorrect and should be changed to 『8:30 a.m.』 to ensure clarity of meaning.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts.
correction: a.m.,
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, the time adverbial 〈From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m.〉 as a sentence-initial element needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma; therefore, a comma 『,』 should be added after 〈9:45 a.m.〉 to standardize the sentence format; ② Noun Error: According to English expression habits, 『a.m.』 needs to be added to specify the morning period; the original format 〈9:45〉 is incorrect and should be changed to 『9:45 a.m.』 to ensure clarity of meaning.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts. In the daytime, I do my homework.
error: in the day time
correction: . In the daytime,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the preceding clause 〈read English texts〉 and the following clause 〈do homework〉 are independent sentences, lacking a period separator between them; a period 『.』 should be added after 〈read English texts〉; ② Space Error: Based on the sentence meaning, the intention is to express "in the daytime," thus 〈day time〉 is an incorrect spelling of 『daytime』; it needs to be changed to 『daytime』 for the meaning to be coherent.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: In the daytime, I do my homework. In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook food.
error: in
correction: . In
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the preceding clause 〈do my homework〉 and the following clause 〈take exercise〉 are two independent sentences, lacking a period separator between them, which leads to a confusing sentence structure; a period 『.』 should be added after 〈do my homework〉 to make the sentence structure clear and coherent.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook food.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, parallel actions 〈take exercise〉, 〈clean the house〉, and 〈cook food〉 need to be separated by commas; the original sentence lacks a comma, resulting in an unclear sentence structure, therefore, a comma 『,』 should be added after 〈exercise〉 to standardize the sentence structure.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook food.
error: clean
correction: , clean the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a comma is missing between the parallel actions 〈take exercise〉, 〈clean house〉, and 〈cook food〉; a comma 『,』 should be added before 〈clean〉 to separate the list of actions; ② Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈house〉 as a countable noun requires the determiner 『the』 to refer to a specific object; the original sentence lacks the determiner, so 『the』 needs to be added to make the sentence clear and complete.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook food. After supper I watch TV or movies.
error: after
correction: . After
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the preceding clause 〈cook food〉 and the following clause 〈watch TV〉 are two independent sentences, lacking a period separator between them, causing semantic run-on. Therefore, a period 『.』 should be added after 〈cook food〉, changing 〈after〉 to 『. After』 to clarify the sentence structure and ensure smooth coherence.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: After supper I watch TV or movies. This is my winter holiday.
error: this
correction: . This
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a period is missing between the preceding clause 〈watch TV or movies〉 and the concluding sentence “This is...”, resulting in an incorrect connection of independent clauses, which is a punctuation error. A period needs to be added after 〈watch TV or movies〉, and 〈this〉 should be changed to 『. This』 to correct the sentence structure and ensure the meaning is complete.
error_sentence: In the 7:40am I get up and wash my teeth from 8:30 to 9:45 I read English texts in the day time I do my homework in the afternoon I take exercise clean house and cook food after supper I watch TV or movies this is my winter hoilday
correct_sentence: This is my winter holiday.
error: hoilday
correction: holiday.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: Based on the sentence meaning, the intention is to express "holiday," thus 〈hoilday〉 is a misspelling of 『holiday』; it needs to be changed to 『holiday』 for the meaning to be coherent; ② Punctuation Error: A declarative sentence must end with a period, so a period 『.』 is added here.