Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
Gao feng is like soccer, he has 4 soccers and many soccer starts photoes. But he never play soccer, he just watch soccer on TV, he has two friends Mike and Dave. Mike is like basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring. Dave is like soccer, but he doesn't like baseball, because he thinks it's difficult.

Corrected essay:
Gao Feng likes soccer. He has 4 footballs and many soccer stars' photos. But he never plays soccer. He just watches soccer on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Mike likes basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring. Dave likes soccer, but he doesn't like baseball, because he thinks it's difficult.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Gao feng is like soccer, he has 4 soccers and many soccer starts photoes.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng likes soccer. He has 4 footballs and many soccer stars' photos.
error: feng is like soccer, he
correction: Feng likes soccer. He
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English proper noun capitalization rules, the Chinese pinyin name 〈feng〉 as part of a name needs to be capitalized, thus corrected to 『Feng』 to conform to naming conventions; ② Word Redundancy Error: The verb phrase 〈is like〉 is redundant and the subject 〈Gao Feng〉 is third-person singular, requiring a singular predicate verb, so the auxiliary verb 〈is〉 is deleted and changed to 『likes』 to accurately express the meaning "Gao Feng likes soccer"; ③ Punctuation Error: The original sentences 〈Gao feng is like soccer〉 and 〈he has 4 soccers〉 are two independent clauses; according to the principle of English sentence completeness, they need to be separated by a period into two independent sentences; ④ Case Error: According to English grammar rules, the word 〈he〉 at the beginning of a sentence must be capitalized, thus corrected to 『He』 to ensure writing conventions.
error_sentence: Gao feng is like soccer, he has 4 soccers and many soccer starts photoes.
correct_sentence: He has 4 footballs and many soccer stars' photos.
error: soccers
correction: footballs
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the semantic distinction of English vocabulary, 〈soccer〉 specifically refers to the sport itself, while the English expression for the physical ball should be 『football』. Therefore, the misused plural noun 〈soccers〉 (referring to multiple soccer sports) needs to be corrected to the plural form 『footballs』 to accurately describe the physical objects of "four footballs".
error_sentence: Gao feng is like soccer, he has 4 soccers and many soccer starts photoes.
correct_sentence: He has 4 footballs and many soccer stars' photos.
error: starts photoes
correction: stars' photos
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the word 〈starts〉 should be the noun meaning "stars" (athletes), thus corrected to 『stars』 to fit the semantics; ② Noun Possessive Error: According to English grammar rules, the possessive of a plural noun should add an apostrophe 〈'〉 directly at the end, so 〈stars〉 needs to be changed to the possessive form 『stars'』 to indicate "of the stars"; ③ Noun Number Error: 〈photoes〉 is an irregular plural spelling error; according to English noun plural rules, countable nouns ending in 〈-o〉 usually add 〈-s〉 directly, thus corrected to 『photos』.
error_sentence: But he never play soccer, he just watch soccer on TV, he has two friends Mike and Dave.
correct_sentence: But he never plays soccer. He just watches soccer on TV.
error: play soccer, he just watch
correction: plays soccer. He just watches
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈he〉 is third-person singular; according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb needs to be in the third-person singular form. Therefore, the base form verb 〈play〉 should be changed to 『plays』 to maintain subject-verb agreement; ② Punctuation Error: The original sentence uses a comma to connect two independent clauses, violating English sentence structure rules. According to English writing conventions, independent clauses need to be separated by a period or semicolon, thus a period is used to separate the sentences; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, when the pronoun 〈he〉 is at the beginning of a sentence, its first letter must be capitalized, thus corrected to 『He』; ④ Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈he〉 is third-person singular; according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb needs to be in the third-person singular form. Therefore, 〈watch〉 should be changed to 『watches』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: But he never play soccer, he just watch soccer on TV, he has two friends Mike and Dave.
correct_sentence: He just watches soccer on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave.
error: , he
correction: . He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The original clauses 〈...watch soccer on TV〉 and 〈he has two friends Mike and Dave〉 are two independent clauses; according to the principle of English sentence completeness, they need to be separated by a period 『.』 into two independent sentences, and the first word 〈he〉 must be capitalized, thus corrected to 『. He』 to ensure writing conventions.
error_sentence: But he never play soccer, he just watch soccer on TV, he has two friends Mike and Dave.
correct_sentence: He has two friends, Mike and Dave.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, the appositive 〈Mike and Dave〉, as a specific explanation of the preceding noun 〈friends〉, needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added after 〈friends〉, forming the standard separation structure 『friends, Mike and Dave』, to clarify the appositive relationship.
error_sentence: Mike is like basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring.
correct_sentence: Mike likes basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring.
error: is like
correction: likes
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression habits, the linking verb structure 〈is like〉 is typically used to describe similarity rather than express preference; therefore, the redundant expression 〈is like〉 is changed to the more concise and accurate verb 『likes』 to fit the semantic expression of "preference". The original structure is redundant; using the base verb directly clearly conveys the subject's preference.
error_sentence: Dave is like soccer, but he doesn't like baseball, because he thinks it's difficult.
correct_sentence: Dave likes soccer, but he doesn't like baseball, because he thinks it's difficult.
error: is like
correction: likes
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression habits, the linking verb structure 〈is like〉 is typically used to describe similarity rather than express preference; therefore, the redundant expression 〈is like〉 is changed to the more concise and accurate verb 『likes』 to fit the semantic expression of "preference". The original structure is redundant; using the base verb directly clearly conveys the subject's preference.