Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
GaoFeng is likes soccer, he has four soccers and many soccerstars photoes, but he never play soccer, he just playsoccerr test on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Mike is likes basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring. Dave is likes soccer, too. He doesn't like baseball, because he thinks it's difficult.

Corrected essay:
Gao Feng likes soccer. He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays soccer. He just watches soccer on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Mike likes basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring. Dave likes soccer, too. He doesn't like baseball, because he thinks it's difficult.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: GaoFeng is likes soccer, he has four soccers and many soccerstars photoes, but he never play soccer, he just playsoccerr test on TV.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng likes soccer.
error: GaoFeng is
correction: Gao Feng
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Space Error: In English writing of Chinese names, the surname and given name need to be separated by a space. In the original sentence, “GaoFeng” is not separated, which does not conform to the norm and is a space error; 〈GaoFeng〉 should be changed to 『Gao Feng』; ② Auxiliary Error: According to English grammar rules, a sentence can only contain one predicate verb. Here “like” is a lexical verb, meaning “to like,” and cannot be used with “is”. The phrase “is likes” in the original sentence does not conform to grammatical rules; the redundant 〈is〉 should be removed, retaining 『likes』.
error_sentence: GaoFeng is likes soccer, he has four soccers and many soccerstars photoes, but he never play soccer, he just playsoccerr test on TV.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng likes soccer. He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays soccer.
error: , he
correction: . He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent clauses cannot be connected solely by a comma, otherwise it results in a comma splice error. In the original sentence, “Gao Feng likes soccer” and “he has four...” are independent clauses separated only by a comma, which does not conform to the norm and is a punctuation error. 〈, he〉 should be changed to 『. He』.
error_sentence: GaoFeng is likes soccer, he has four soccers and many soccerstars photoes, but he never play soccer, he just playsoccerr test on TV.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays soccer.
error: soccers
correction: soccer balls
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to English expression habits, “soccer” refers to the sport itself, not the physical object; “soccer ball” should be used to specifically refer to the ball. Since the quantifier “four” is mentioned, “soccer ball” must be in the plural form “soccer balls”; therefore, 〈soccers〉 should be changed to 『soccer balls』.
error_sentence: GaoFeng is likes soccer, he has four soccers and many soccerstars photoes, but he never play soccer, he just playsoccerr test on TV.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays soccer.
error: soccerstars photoes
correction: soccer stars' photos
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈soccerstars〉 should be two words, needing to be split into “soccer” and “stars” to mean “soccer stars”; ② Noun Possessive Error: According to English grammar rules and writing conventions, when indicating possession for plural nouns ending in “s”, the possessive form is made by adding an apostrophe (') at the end. To express the possessive relationship 'of the soccer stars', “soccer stars” should be changed to the possessive form 『soccer stars'』; ③ Spelling Error: Based on the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express “photos”. The spelling “photoes” is incorrect; the correct spelling is 『photos』.
error_sentence: GaoFeng is likes soccer, he has four soccers and many soccerstars photoes, but he never play soccer, he just playsoccerr test on TV.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' photos, but he never plays soccer. He just watches soccer on TV.
error: play soccer, he just playsoccerr test
correction: plays soccer. He just watches soccer
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, when the subject is third-person singular (e.g., “he”), the present simple tense verb must take the third-person singular form. In the original sentence, the subject “he” is third-person singular, but the verb “play” is not in the third-person singular form, resulting in subject-verb disagreement; 〈play〉 needs to be changed to 『plays』; ② Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation norms, two independent clauses cannot be connected solely by a comma, otherwise it leads to sentence structure confusion. In the original sentence, “he never...” and “he just...” contain independent predicate structures and should be separated by a period. This is a punctuation error; 〈,he〉 should be changed to 『. He』 to clarify the sentence structure; ③ Verb Choice Error: Based on the context, the intended meaning is “watching soccer matches”. “play” means “to engage in (a game or activity)” or “kick”, which is semantically inappropriate here. “watch” is the correct expression for “viewing”. Watching soccer matches is expressed in English as “watch soccer”; therefore, 〈playsoccerr test〉 should be changed to 『watches soccer』.
error_sentence: Mike is likes basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring.
correct_sentence: Mike likes basketball, but he doesn't like ping-pong, because he thinks it's boring.
error: is
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to English grammar rules, when “like” is used as a lexical verb meaning “to enjoy” or “be fond of”, it directly takes an object and does not require an additional auxiliary verb to form the basic expression. The 〈is〉 in the original sentence is a redundant auxiliary verb and should be deleted.
error_sentence: Dave is likes soccer, too.
correct_sentence: Dave likes soccer, too.
error: is
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to English grammar rules, when “like” is used as a lexical verb meaning “to enjoy” or “be fond of”, it directly takes an object and does not require an additional auxiliary verb to form the basic expression. The 〈is〉 in the original sentence is a redundant auxiliary verb and should be deleted.