Writing prompt: Written Expression.
Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay.
Based on the information provided by Tom below, and referring to the picture, describe Tom's activities for next weekend using the simple future tense:
Writing hints:
On Saturday: do his homework 9:30; watch TV 11:00; go to the park in the afternoon
On Sunday: clean his room 10:00; play basketball 14:00; have a bath 18:00

Student essay:
Welcome to Tom's weekend plan! He has seven things to do in weekend, I know you like to read it, so I'm happy to show you that can help you make plan about weekend. On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes. On sunday, he will done his all the homework, so he will clean his room in 10o'clock, if you don't clean room, he won't have a great life. Then, at 14o'clock , he will play basketball that will good at his healthy. When it will over, he will have a bath. What a perfect plan! How about your plan?

Corrected essay:
Welcome to Tom's weekend plan! He has seven things to do on the weekend. I know you like to read it, so I'm happy to show you that it can help you make plans for the weekend. On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30 a.m. It will be the most boring thing of the day, but after that, he will have a rest and watch TV at 11 o'clock. Then his mom will take him to the park, because going outside will be good for his eyes. On Sunday, he will finish all his homework, so he will clean his room at 10 o'clock. If he doesn't clean his room, he won't have a great life. Then, at 14 o'clock, he will play basketball, which will be good for his health. When it is over, he will have a bath. What a perfect plan! How about your plan?

Error analysis:
error_sentence: He has seven things to do in weekend, I know you like to read it, so I'm happy to show you that can help you make plan about weekend.
correct_sentence: He has seven things to do on the weekend.
error: in weekend,
correction: on the weekend.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English usage, the preposition 『on』 is used for specific dates or periods of a day; the original phrase 〈in weekend〉 is incorrect, so it is changed to 『on the weekend』 to conform to English usage; ② Determiner Error: According to English usage, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; phrases referring to specific time periods like 〈weekend〉 usually require the article 『the』 to clearly refer to the specific holiday, so 〈weekend〉 is changed to 『the weekend』 to conform to idiomatic English expression; ③ Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentences 〈He has seven things to do in weekend〉 and 〈I know you like to read it〉 are two independent clauses and should be separated by a 『.』; therefore, the comma 〈,〉 needs to be replaced with a 『.』 to make the sentence structure correct.
error_sentence: He has seven things to do in weekend, I know you like to read it, so I'm happy to show you that can help you make plan about weekend.
correct_sentence: I know you like to read it, so I'm happy to show you that it can help you make plans for the weekend.
correction: it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules and context, an English sentence must have a subject; the original phrase 〈can help you〉 lacks a subject, so the pronoun 『it』 needs to be added to make the expression complete and maintain coherence.
error_sentence: He has seven things to do in weekend, I know you like to read it, so I'm happy to show you that can help you make plan about weekend.
correct_sentence: I know you like to read it, so I'm happy to show you that it can help you make plans for the weekend.
error: plan about
correction: plans for the
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules and context, the meaning here is "make plans," which requires the plural form of the noun; the original word 〈plan〉 is singular, so it needs to be changed to 『plans』 to be consistent with the context; ② Preposition Error: According to English usage, the preposition 『for』 is used to express purpose, so 〈about〉 should be changed to 『for』 to conform to English usage; ③ Determiner Error: According to English usage, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; phrases referring to specific time periods like 〈weekend〉 usually require the article 『the』 to clearly refer to the specific holiday, so 〈weekend〉 is changed to 『the weekend』 to conform to idiomatic English expression.
error_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes.
correct_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30 a.m. It will be the most boring thing of the day, but after that, he will have a rest and watch TV at 11 o'clock.
error: , it
correction: a.m. It
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English usage, "a.m." or "p.m." is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon; here, the time expression 〈9:30〉 needs 『a.m.』 added to specify the time; ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, the original sentences 〈Tom will do his homework〉 and 〈it will be the most bored thing〉 have complete subject-verb structures; a comma 〈,〉 cannot be used to separate two independent clauses, so it needs to be changed to a 『.』 to conform to English writing conventions.
error_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes.
correct_sentence: It will be the most boring thing of the day, but after that, he will have a rest and watch TV at 11 o'clock.
error: bored thing in
correction: boring thing of
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Adjective Error: According to English usage and context, the adjective 〈bored〉 describes a person's feeling, while 『boring』 describes the attribute of a thing; in the original sentence, it modifies 〈thing〉, which is an object, so 〈bored〉 should be changed to 『boring』 to fit the context; ② Preposition Error: According to English usage, 『of the day』 is used to express possession or relation, so the original phrase 〈in the day〉 needs to be changed to 『of the day』 to conform to usage.
error_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes.
correct_sentence: It will be the most boring thing of the day, but after that, he will have a rest and watch TV at 11 o'clock.
error: about
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English usage, 『and』 connects two actions; in the original sentence, 〈have a rest〉 and 〈watch TV〉 are parallel structures, so 〈about〉 should be changed to 『and』 to conform to English usage.
error_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes.
correct_sentence: It will be the most boring thing of the day, but after that, he will have a rest and watch TV at 11 o'clock. Then his mom will take him to the park, because going outside will be good for his eyes.
error: 11o'clock, then
correction: 11 o'clock. Then
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, time expressions require a space; the original 〈11o'clock〉 lacks a space, so it should be changed to 『11 o'clock』 to conform to conventions; ② Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the original clauses 〈he will have a rest〉 and 〈then his mom will take...〉 have complete subject-verb structures; a comma 〈,〉 cannot be used to separate two independent clauses, so it needs to be changed to a 『.』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes.
correct_sentence: Then his mom will take him to the park, because going outside will be good for his eyes.
error: he go to
correction: him to the
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, the objective case is required after a verb; the verb 〈take〉 requires the objective pronoun 『him』, so the subjective 〈he〉 should be changed to 『him』 to conform to grammar rules; ② Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the location noun 〈park〉 in the original sentence should refer to a specific place, thus requiring the definite article 『the』 before 〈park〉 to indicate specificity; it should be changed to 『to the park』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes.
correct_sentence: Then his mom will take him to the park, because going outside will be good for his eyes.
error: go to
correction: going
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, a gerund is required as the subject after the conjunction 〈because〉; the original word 〈go〉 is the base form of the verb, so it needs to be changed to the present participle form 『going』 to conform to grammar.
error_sentence: On Saturday, Tom will do his homework at 9:30, it will be the most bored thing in the day, but after that, he will have a rest about watch TV at 11o'clock, then his mom will take he go to park, because go to outside will good for his eyes.
correct_sentence: Then his mom will take him to the park, because going outside will be good for his eyes.
correction: be
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English grammar rules, a subject complement structure needs to be complete; the original phrase 〈go to outside will good for his eyes〉 lacks a linking verb. 『be』 needs to be added to connect the adjective 〈good〉, forming 『will be good』 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: On sunday, he will done his all the homework, so he will clean his room in 10o'clock, if you don't clean room, he won't have a great life.
correct_sentence: On Sunday, he will finish all his homework, so he will clean his room at 10 o'clock.
error: sunday
correction: Sunday
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a proper noun needs to be capitalized; 〈sunday〉 is a proper noun meaning "Sunday," so it needs to be changed to 『Sunday』 to conform to conventions.
error_sentence: On sunday, he will done his all the homework, so he will clean his room in 10o'clock, if you don't clean room, he won't have a great life.
correct_sentence: On Sunday, he will finish all his homework, so he will clean his room at 10 o'clock.
error: done his all the
correction: finish all his
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence means "finish"; the original word 〈done〉 means "do," which does not fit the meaning, so 〈done〉 needs to be changed to 『finish』 to fit the context; ② Word Order Error: According to grammar rules, the determiner 〈all〉 should precede the pronoun 〈his〉; therefore, the original phrase 〈his all the homework〉 needs to be changed to the word order 『all his homework』 to conform to grammar.
error_sentence: On sunday, he will done his all the homework, so he will clean his room in 10o'clock, if you don't clean room, he won't have a great life.
correct_sentence: On Sunday, he will finish all his homework, so he will clean his room at 10 o'clock. If he doesn't clean his room, he won't have a great life.
error: in 10o'clock, if you do
correction: at 10 o'clock. If he does
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English usage, the preposition 『at』 is used to indicate specific times; in the original sentence, 〈10o'clock〉 is a specific time, so 〈in〉 should be changed to 『at』 to conform to usage; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, time expressions require a space; the original 〈10o'clock〉 lacks a space, so it should be changed to 『10 o'clock』 to conform to conventions; ③ Pronoun Error: According to the context, the intended meaning refers to "he"; the pronoun 〈you〉 in the original sentence is incorrect, so 〈you〉 should be changed to 『he』 to fit the context; ④ Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the original clauses “he will clean...” and “If he doesn't clean...” have complete subject-verb structures; a comma 〈,〉 cannot be used to separate two independent clauses, so it needs to be changed to a 『.』 to conform to English grammar rules.
error_sentence: On sunday, he will done his all the homework, so he will clean his room in 10o'clock, if you don't clean room, he won't have a great life.
correct_sentence: If he doesn't clean his room, he won't have a great life.
correction: his
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈room〉 in the original sentence lacks a necessary determiner to specify the object; therefore, 『his』 needs to be added before 〈room〉 to clarify possession.
error_sentence: Then, at 14o'clock , he will play basketball that will good at his healthy.
correct_sentence: Then, at 14 o'clock, he will play basketball, which will be good for his health.
error: 14o'clock
correction: 14 o'clock
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, time expressions require a space; the original 〈14o'clock〉 lacks a space, so it should be changed to 『14 o'clock』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: Then, at 14o'clock , he will play basketball that will good at his healthy.
correct_sentence: Then, at 14 o'clock, he will play basketball, which will be good for his health.
error: that will good at his healthy
correction: , which will be good for his health
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Relative Word Error: According to English grammar rules, a non-restrictive relative clause requires the relative pronoun 『which』; the original phrase 〈he will play basketball that will〉 incorrectly uses 〈that〉, so 〈that〉 needs to be changed to 『, which』 to conform to English grammar; ② Verb Choice Error: According to English grammar rules, a subject complement structure needs to be complete; the original phrase 〈will good at〉 lacks a linking verb. 『be』 needs to be added to connect the adjective 〈good〉, forming 『will be good』 to conform to grammar rules; ③ Preposition Error: According to English usage, the preposition 『for』 is used to express purpose or benefit; here, the intended meaning is "good for health," so the original 〈at〉 needs to be changed to 『for』 to conform to English usage; ④ Noun Error: According to the context, the meaning here is "health," which requires a noun; the original adjective 〈healthy〉 needs to be changed to the noun 『health』 to fit the context.
error_sentence: When it will over, he will have a bath.
correct_sentence: When it is over, he will have a bath.
error: will
correction: is
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, the simple present tense should be used in adverbial clauses of time to express future meaning; the original word 〈will〉 indicates future tense, which is a tense error, so 〈will〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『is』, forming 『When it is over』 to conform to grammar rules.