Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. It is 3 PM. Based on the information provided below about Linda, use the present continuous tense to describe what Linda sees and hears at the mall:
Writing hints:
A little girl: buy some food
A young lady: look at a dress
Linda's mother: try on the shoes
Linda's father: stay on the sofa; wait for

Student essay:
Now is three o'clock in the afternoon. Linda's mother is trying the shoes in the shoe shop. She's father is waiting for staying on the sofa reading a mageiche. She after see a little girl buying some food, she see a young lady looking at a dress.

Corrected essay:
Now it is three o'clock in the afternoon. Linda's mother is trying on the shoes in the shoe shop. Her father is waiting while staying on the sofa, reading a magazine. She sees a little girl buying some food, and she sees a young lady looking at a dress.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Now is three o'clock in the afternoon.
correct_sentence: Now it is three o'clock in the afternoon.
correction: it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, describing objective situations like time or weather requires the use of the expletive subject 『it』 to form a fixed sentence pattern. The original sentence lacks the necessary subject after 〈Now〉; therefore, the expletive subject 『it』 is added, changing the incomplete 〈Now〉 to the grammatically correct structure “Now it is...” to form a proper time expression.
error_sentence: Linda's mother is trying the shoes in the shoe shop.
correct_sentence: Linda's mother is trying on the shoes in the shoe shop.
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, the phrasal verb “try on” meaning “to test clothing/footwear for fit” must include the preposition “on”. The original phrase 〈trying shoes〉 lacks the necessary preposition; therefore, the missing preposition 『on』 is added to the present participle 〈trying〉, changing the incomplete 〈trying shoes〉 to the idiomatic expression 『trying on shoes』 to accurately convey the complete meaning of the action of trying on.
error_sentence: She's father is waiting for staying on the sofa reading a mageiche.
correct_sentence: Her father is waiting while staying on the sofa, reading a magazine.
error: She's
correction: Her
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈She's〉 is the contraction for “she is” or “she has”, whereas a possessive determiner is needed here to modify the noun 〈father〉. Therefore, the misused nominative contraction 〈She's〉 is changed to the possessive determiner 『Her』, forming the correct possessive structure 『Her father』 to accurately express possession.
error_sentence: She's father is waiting for staying on the sofa reading a mageiche.
correct_sentence: Her father is waiting while staying on the sofa, reading a magazine.
error: for
correction: while
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, when expressing two simultaneous continuous actions, 〈waiting〉 and 〈staying〉 as parallel present participles require the temporal conjunction 『while』 to clarify the time relationship. The original sentence uses 〈for〉, which indicates purpose, causing logical confusion; therefore, the incorrect conjunction 〈for〉 is changed to the correct temporal conjunction 『while』, forming the grammatically correct structure 『waiting while staying』 to accurately express the simultaneity of the two actions.
error_sentence: She's father is waiting for staying on the sofa reading a mageiche.
correct_sentence: Her father is waiting while staying on the sofa, reading a magazine.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to the rules for participial phrases acting as adverbials in English grammar, when the present participle phrase 〈reading a magazine〉 indicates a secondary action occurring simultaneously with the main clause's action, it must be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, the missing comma 『,』 is added after 〈sofa〉, modifying the original sentence to “...on the sofa, reading a magazine”, clarifying the main-subordinate relationship and conforming to English punctuation standards.
error_sentence: She's father is waiting for staying on the sofa reading a mageiche.
correct_sentence: Her father is waiting while staying on the sofa, reading a magazine.
error: mageiche
correction: magazine
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English spelling conventions, 〈mageiche〉 is an incorrect spelling; the correct noun should be 『magazine』, meaning “a periodical publication”. Therefore, the letter order is adjusted, changing 〈mageiche〉 with its incorrect letter combination to the standard noun 『magazine』 that conforms to English morphology, to maintain accuracy in written expression.
error_sentence: She after see a little girl buying some food, she see a young lady looking at a dress.
correct_sentence: She sees a little girl buying some food, and she sees a young lady looking at a dress.
error: after see
correction: sees
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: Improper conjunction: 〈after〉 as a temporal adverbial introducer conflicts logically with the present tense; according to the sentence meaning, this word should be deleted, using the “she sees...” structure directly to maintain tense consistency, conforming to the grammatical norm of using the present tense to describe immediate observations; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the contextual tense requirements, the main clause describing the current observation should use the simple present tense. The subject is the third-person singular 〈she〉, so the base verb 〈see〉 is changed to the third-person singular form 『sees』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: She after see a little girl buying some food, she see a young lady looking at a dress.
correct_sentence: She sees a little girl buying some food, and she sees a young lady looking at a dress.
error: she see
correction: and she sees
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English rules for compound sentences, a coordinating conjunction must be used to connect two parallel predicate verbs 〈see〉. Therefore, the missing conjunction 『and』 is added, correcting the structure to “sees...and sees...” to establish the correct parallel relationship; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: Since the subject 〈she〉 is third-person singular, according to the English present tense subject-verb agreement principle, the base verb 〈see〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『sees』. Therefore, it is corrected to “she sees...” to ensure agreement in number between the subject and the predicate verb.