Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
My name is Gaofeng. I have four soccers and have many soccer star photoes, but I don't play soccer. I only TV watch soccer games. I have friends . They are Mike and Dave. Mike likes play basketball, but he don't like play ping-pong. Because it is boring. Dave he likes play soccer, but he don't play baskeball. Because it is difficult.

Corrected essay:
My name is Gao Feng. I have four soccer and have many soccer stars' photos, but I don't play soccer. I only watch soccer games. I have friends. They are Mike and Dave. Mike likes to play basketball, but he doesn't like to play ping-pong because it is boring. Dave likes to play soccer, but he doesn't play basketball because it is difficult.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My name is Gaofeng.
correct_sentence: My name is Gao Feng.
error: Gaofeng
correction: Gao Feng
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is needed between the surname and given name when a Chinese name is transliterated into English. Therefore, the conjoined 〈Gaofeng〉 should be changed to 『Gao feng』 to conform to English name writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, when a two-character Chinese name is transliterated into English, the first letters of both the surname and the given name should be capitalized. Therefore, 〈Gao feng〉 needs to be changed to 『Gao Feng』 to conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: I have four soccers and have many soccer star photoes, but I don't play soccer.
correct_sentence: I have four soccer and have many soccer stars' photos, but I don't play soccer.
error: soccers
correction: soccer
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Noun Number Error: Correction is incorrect.
error_sentence: I have four soccers and have many soccer star photoes, but I don't play soccer.
correct_sentence: I have four soccer and have many soccer stars' photos, but I don't play soccer.
error: star photoes
correction: stars' photos
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the prompt “many photos of soccer stars”, the plural form of the countable noun “star” is needed here; 〈star〉 should be changed to 『stars』 to conform to the original prompt; ② Noun Possessive Error: According to the prompt “many photos of soccer stars”, there is a possessive relationship between “photos” and “stars”; the plural form 〈stars〉 needs to be changed to the plural possessive form 『stars'』 to indicate many stars; ③ Spelling Error: According to English word spelling rules, the correct spelling for the plural form of the word photo is “photos”. The incorrect spelling 〈photoes〉 needs to be changed to 『photos』 to conform to word spelling rules and the original prompt.
error_sentence: I only TV watch soccer games.
correct_sentence: I only watch soccer games.
error: TV
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the prompt, the intention here is to express “watch soccer games”. The verb phrase “watch soccer games” can accurately convey the meaning of “watch soccer games”. Therefore, there is a word redundancy error here. 〈TV〉 needs to be deleted to make the sentence more concise and conform to the original intended meaning.
error_sentence: Mike likes play basketball, but he don't like play ping-pong.
correct_sentence: Mike likes to play basketball, but he doesn't like to play ping-pong because it is boring.
correction: to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb “like” is followed by an infinitive structure, it means “to enjoy doing something”. The original sentence lacks the infinitive marker; therefore, there is a nonfinite verb form error. 『to』 needs to be added after 〈likes〉 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: Mike likes play basketball, but he don't like play ping-pong.
correct_sentence: Mike likes to play basketball, but he doesn't like to play ping-pong because it is boring.
error: do
correction: does
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the third-person singular subject 〈he〉 requires the third-person singular form of the auxiliary verb; there is a subject-verb agreement error here. The first/second person auxiliary verb 〈do〉 needs to be changed to the third-person auxiliary verb 『does』 to form the corresponding negative auxiliary contraction with “n't” to conform to the subject-verb agreement principle.
error_sentence: Mike likes play basketball, but he don't like play ping-pong.
correct_sentence: Mike likes to play basketball, but he doesn't like to play ping-pong because it is boring.
correction: to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb “like” is followed by an infinitive structure, it means “to enjoy doing something”. The original sentence lacks the infinitive marker; therefore, there is a nonfinite verb form error. 『to』 needs to be added after 〈like〉 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: Mike likes play basketball, but he don't like play ping-pong. Because it is boring.
correct_sentence: Mike likes to play basketball, but he doesn't like to play ping-pong because it is boring.
error: . Because
correction: because
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English syntax rules, an adverbial clause of reason introduced by “because” in a complex sentence needs to be closely connected to the main clause and cannot stand as an independent sentence. The original sentence “Because...” is the reason for the preceding sentence “he doesn't like to play ping-pong”; the two sentences can be combined into one complex sentence, with the “Because...” clause functioning as an adverbial clause of reason in the complex sentence. Therefore, there is a punctuation error here. 〈. Because〉 needs to be changed to 『because』 to conform to English syntax rules.
error_sentence: Dave he likes play soccer, but he don't play baskeball.
correct_sentence: Dave likes to play soccer, but he doesn't play basketball because it is difficult.
error: he likes
correction: likes to
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: The subject of the original sentence 〈Dave〉 is already clear; there is no need to repeat the third-person singular pronoun. There is word redundancy here; the redundant pronoun 〈he〉 needs to be deleted; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb “like” is followed by an infinitive structure, it means “to enjoy doing something”. The original sentence lacks the infinitive marker; therefore, there is a nonfinite verb form error. 〈likes〉 needs to be changed to 『like to』 to conform to grammar rules.
error_sentence: Dave he likes play soccer, but he don't play baskeball.
correct_sentence: Dave likes to play soccer, but he doesn't play basketball because it is difficult.
error: do
correction: does
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the third-person singular subject 〈he〉 requires the third-person singular form of the auxiliary verb; there is a subject-verb agreement error here. The first/second person auxiliary verb 〈do〉 needs to be changed to the third-person auxiliary verb 『does』 to form the corresponding negative auxiliary contraction with “n't” to conform to the subject-verb agreement principle.
error_sentence: Dave he likes play soccer, but he don't play baskeball. Because it is difficult.
correct_sentence: Dave likes to play soccer, but he doesn't play basketball because it is difficult.
error: baskeball. Because
correction: basketball because
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English word spelling rules, the correct spelling for the word “basketball” is “basketball”. The incorrect spelling 〈baskeball〉 needs to be changed to 『basketball』 to conform to word spelling rules; ② Punctuation Error: According to English syntax rules, an adverbial clause of reason introduced by “because” in a complex sentence needs to be closely connected to the main clause and cannot stand as an independent sentence. The original sentence “Because...” is the reason for the preceding sentence “he doesn't play basketball”; the two sentences can be combined into one complex sentence. Therefore, 〈. Because〉 needs to be changed to 『because』 to conform to English syntax rules.