Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Assume you are Tina; introduce your Monday routine to everyone. Writing hints: get up; have breakfast; go to school; begin; have lunch; go home.

Student essay:
Hellow everyone my name is Tina, I'm a student. Now let me tell you my this Monday's life. On this Monday, I get up at seven o'clovk, I go to school at half past seven, class begin at eight, I eat lunch at 12 o'clock and I go home at 20 o'clock. This is my beautiful life.

Corrected essay:
Hello everyone, my name is Tina, and I'm a student. Now let me tell you about my life on this Monday. On this Monday, I get up at seven o'clock. I go to school at half past seven, and classes begin at eight o'clock. I eat lunch at 12 o'clock and I go home at 20:00. This is my beautiful life.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Hellow everyone my name is Tina, I'm a student.
correct_sentence: Hello everyone, my name is Tina, and I'm a student.
error: Hellow everyone
correction: Hello everyone,
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express 'Hello everyone', therefore 〈Hellow〉 is a misspelling of 『Hello』; it needs to be corrected from 〈Hellow〉 to 『Hello』 for correct expression; ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, a comma is usually required after a greeting at the beginning of a sentence to highlight the address and make the sentence structure clear. The original sentence lacks a comma after 'Hello everyone'. A 『,』 should be added after 〈everyone〉, changing it to 'Hello everyone,' to comply with punctuation rules.
error_sentence: Hellow everyone my name is Tina, I'm a student.
correct_sentence: Hello everyone, my name is Tina, and I'm a student.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, 'my name is Tina' and 'I'm a student' are two independent clauses which need to be joined by a conjunction in a coordinate relationship to maintain sentence coherence. The original sentence lacks a conjunction, not conforming to the rules for connecting compound sentences. The conjunction 『and』 should be added to connect the two clauses, making the sentence structure complete and the meaning clear.
error_sentence: Now let me tell you my this Monday's life.
correct_sentence: Now let me tell you about my life on this Monday.
error: my
correction: about my life on
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb 〈tell〉 means 'to inform,' it is often used with the preposition 〈about〉 to form the structure 'tell sb. about sth.,' meaning 'to tell someone about something'. The original sentence lacks the preposition 'about' after 〈tell〉; 『about』 should be added to make the expression complete and accurate; ② Preposition Error: In English, when expressing 'on a specific day,' the preposition 'on' is required. 'this Monday' is a specific day, and 'on this Monday' functions as an adverbial of time. It clarifies the time context in which the 'life' occurs. The preposition 『on』 should be added before 〈this Monday〉 to accurately express the meaning 'life on this Monday'; ③ Word Order Error: According to English expression conventions, the time adverbial 'on this Monday' should typically be placed after the noun it modifies. The word order in the original phrase 'this Monday's life' is incorrect. The time adverbial should be moved after the noun 〈life〉, changing it to 'life on this Monday' to conform to English expression habits.
error_sentence: Now let me tell you my this Monday's life.
correct_sentence: Now let me tell you about my life on this Monday.
error: 's life
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: In the original phrase 'this Monday's life,' the part 〈's life〉 is semantically redundant. After removing 〈's life〉, 'this Monday' alone can specify the time, and the sentence meaning remains complete and clear. Therefore, 〈's life〉 should be deleted, changing it to 'this Monday'.
error_sentence: On this Monday, I get up at seven o'clovk, I go to school at half past seven, class begin at eight, I eat lunch at 12 o'clock and I go home at 20 o'clock.
correct_sentence: On this Monday, I get up at seven o'clock.
error: o'clovk,
correction: o'clock.
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express 'o'clock' (on the hour), therefore 〈o'clovk〉 is a misspelling of 『o'clock』; it needs to be corrected from 〈o'clovk〉 to 『o'clock』 for correct expression; ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, a sentence needs to end with the correct punctuation mark. In the original phrase 'at seven o'clovk,', the comma here is used improperly and cannot end the sentence. The comma should be changed to a period, modifying 〈o'clovk,〉 to 『o'clock.』 to make the sentence conform to writing conventions.
error_sentence: On this Monday, I get up at seven o'clovk, I go to school at half past seven, class begin at eight, I eat lunch at 12 o'clock and I go home at 20 o'clock.
correct_sentence: I go to school at half past seven, and classes begin at eight o'clock.
error: class
correction: and classes
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, 'I go to school at half past seven' and 'class begin at eight' are two independent sentences which need to be joined by a conjunction in the middle to maintain sentence coherence. The original sentence lacks a conjunction, not conforming to sentence structure requirements. The conjunction 『and』 should be added to make the sentence meaning clearer; ② Noun Number Error: According to the context, the meaning here is that multiple classes start at eight o'clock. In the original sentence, 〈class〉 is singular and cannot accurately convey the meaning of 'multiple classes'. It should be changed to the plural form 『classes』 so that the noun form matches the actual meaning.
error_sentence: On this Monday, I get up at seven o'clovk, I go to school at half past seven, class begin at eight, I eat lunch at 12 o'clock and I go home at 20 o'clock.
correct_sentence: I go to school at half past seven, and classes begin at eight o'clock.
error: ,
correction: o'clock.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to English writing conventions, 『o'clock』 needs to be added after the time expression 〈at eight〉 to specify the time clearly; ② Punctuation Error: The clauses 'class begin at eight' and 'I eat lunch at 12 o'clock' each contain a predicate structure and are independent sentences; they cannot be joined by a comma in the middle, so the 〈,〉 should be changed to 『o'clock.』.
error_sentence: On this Monday, I get up at seven o'clovk, I go to school at half past seven, class begin at eight, I eat lunch at 12 o'clock and I go home at 20 o'clock.
correct_sentence: I eat lunch at 12 o'clock and I go home at 20:00.
error: 20 o'clock
correction: 20:00
error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Format Error: In expressing time using the 24-hour clock system, English typically uses a colon to separate hours and minutes. The expression 〈20 o'clock〉 in the original sentence does not conform to standard time writing conventions. It should be changed to 『20:00』, using a colon to separate hours and minutes, to make the time expression conform to conventions.