Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Based on the information provided about Sarah and the picture, describe her winter holiday. The beginning is provided:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule.

Student essay:
At 7:40 am, I get up on my bed. After, I brush my teeth. And, I have breakfast. Time go to. At 8:30 to 9:45, I read English text. At the day time, I do my homework. In afternoon, I take exercise, clean house and cook. After supper, I watch TV or movies with my family.

Corrected essay:
At 7:40 am, I get up from my bed. After that, I brush my teeth. And it's time to have breakfast. From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts. During the daytime, I do my homework. In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook. After supper, I watch TV or movies with my family.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: At 7:40 am, I get up on my bed.
correct_sentence: At 7:40 am, I get up from my bed.
error: on
correction: from
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the preposition 〈on〉 is used to indicate position, while 『from』 indicates the origin or starting point of an action; in the original sentence, 〈on my bed〉 does not fit the meaning of "getting up", so it needs to be changed to 『from my bed』 to conform to grammar.
error_sentence: After, I brush my teeth.
correct_sentence: After that, I brush my teeth.
correction: that
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈After〉 as a preposition must be followed by an object; therefore, the pronoun 『that』 is added to form the "After that" structure as a time adverbial, so in the original sentence, an object 『that』 needs to be added after 〈After〉 to make the logical connection clear.
error_sentence: And, I have breakfast.
correct_sentence: And it's time to have breakfast.
error: , I
correction: it's time to
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, there is generally no punctuation after 〈And〉, so 〈And,〉 in the original sentence should be changed to 『And』 to conform to expression habits; ② Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, this means "it's time to...", the original sentence lacks a complete expression for time transition, so 『it's time to』 needs to be added to establish the logic for breakfast time.
error_sentence: Time go to. At 8:30 to 9:45, I read English text.
correct_sentence: From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts.
error: Time go to. At 8:30
correction: From 8:30 a.m.
error_type: Sentence Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Redundancy Error: According to the context, the meaning of the original phrase 〈Time go to〉 is unclear, so the meaningless phrase 〈Time go to〉 is deleted to fit the context; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 〈At〉 is used to indicate specific points in time, while the "From...to" structure is needed to indicate the beginning of a time period, so 〈At〉 needs to be changed to 『From』 to correctly express the time range; ③ Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, "a.m." or "p.m." is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon, here the time expression 〈8:30〉 needs to have 『a.m.』 added to clearly indicate 8:30 in the morning.
error_sentence: At 8:30 to 9:45, I read English text.
correct_sentence: From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts.
correction: a.m.
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, "a.m." or "p.m." is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon; here, the time expression 〈9:45〉 needs to have 『a.m.』 added to clearly indicate the time.
error_sentence: At 8:30 to 9:45, I read English text. At the day time, I do my homework.
correct_sentence: From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts. During the daytime, I do my homework.
error: text. At the day time
correction: texts. During the daytime
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, the word 〈text〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『texts』 to express multiple English texts, so 〈text〉 should be changed to 『texts』 to fit the context; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, 『During』 should be used to express a period of time, so 〈At the day time〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to 『During the daytime』 to conform to semantic logic and English customary expression; ③ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, the compound noun 〈day time〉 in the original text has an extra space, the correct spelling should be the conjoined form 『daytime』, meaning "daytime".
error_sentence: In afternoon, I take exercise, clean house and cook.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English customary expression, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; phrases referring to specific time periods like 〈afternoon〉 usually require the article 『the』 to clearly refer to a specific holiday, so 〈afternoon〉 in the sentence is changed to 『the afternoon』 to conform to English idiomatic expression.
error_sentence: In afternoon, I take exercise, clean house and cook.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; the original sentence's 〈house〉 lacks the necessary determiner 『the』 to specify a particular object, so 『the』 needs to be added before 〈house〉 to clarify the meaning.