Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
Hello! l'm Gao Fong, I like football. I have two good friends. One name is Mike and one name is Dave. Mike likes basketball, he doesn't like ping-pong. Dave likes soccer, he doesn't baseball. I have two good friends.

Corrected essay:
Hello! I'm Gao Feng, and I like football. I have two good friends. One's name is Mike and the other's name is Dave. Mike likes basketball. He doesn't like ping-pong. Dave likes soccer. He doesn't like baseball. I have two good friends.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Hello! l'm Gao Fong, I like football.
correct_sentence: I'm Gao Feng, and I like football.
error: l'm Gao Fong,
correction: I'm Gao Feng, and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: Based on the context, the intended name is "峰", so 〈Fong〉 is a misspelling of 『Feng』; it needs to be changed to 『Feng』 for the sentence to make sense; ② Conjunction Error: 〈I'm Gao Feng〉 and 〈I like football〉 both contain subject-verb structures and can stand alone as sentences; therefore, the conjunction 『and』 should be added before 〈I like football〉 to form a compound sentence; ③ Spelling Error: According to the original sentence, 〈l'm Gao Fong,〉 is meant to express "I am Gao Feng", so the pronoun should be the first person and capitalized as 『I』; thus, 〈l〉 in the original sentence is a spelling error and needs to be changed to 『I』.
error_sentence: One name is Mike and one name is Dave.
correct_sentence: One's name is Mike and the other's name is Dave.
correction: 's
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Possessive Error: According to English possessive grammar rules, 〈One〉 as a determiner needs the possessive form 『's』 added to form 『One's』, indicating the possessive relationship of 'someone's name'.
error_sentence: One name is Mike and one name is Dave.
correct_sentence: One's name is Mike and the other's name is Dave.
error: one
correction: the other's
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, when referring to two objects in a parallel structure, the fixed phrase "one... and the other..." should be used. The original sentence uses 〈one〉 twice; the second repeated 〈one〉 should be changed to 『the other』 to avoid logical confusion; ② Noun Possessive Error: The sentence means "the other person's name is Dave", indicating a possessive relationship between the name and the other person, so the noun possessive form is needed, corrected to 『the other's』.
error_sentence: Mike likes basketball, he doesn't like ping-pong.
correct_sentence: Mike likes basketball. He doesn't like ping-pong.
error: , he
correction: . He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈Mike likes basketball〉 and 〈he doesn't like ping-pong〉 both contain independent subject-verb structures and can stand alone as sentences; therefore, a period, not a comma, should be used to separate the two sentences; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈he〉 at the beginning of a sentence should have its first letter capitalized, changed to 『He』.
error_sentence: Dave likes soccer, he doesn't baseball.
correct_sentence: Dave likes soccer. He doesn't like baseball.
error: , he
correction: . He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈Dave likes soccer〉 and 〈he doesn't baseball〉 both contain independent subject-verb structures and can stand alone as sentences; therefore, a period, not a comma, should be used to separate the two sentences; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈he〉 at the beginning of a sentence should have its first letter capitalized, changed to 『He』.
error_sentence: Dave likes soccer, he doesn't baseball.
correct_sentence: He doesn't like baseball.
correction: like
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English grammar rules, the negative structure "doesn't ..." requires a main verb. The absence of the predicate verb here constitutes a sentence structure error. Based on the intended meaning, the missing predicate verb 『like』 needs to be added after 〈doesn't〉 to form a complete negative sentence.