Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
GaoFen is a soccer fan. He has four soccers and many soccer stars pictures. But he never play soccer. He has two friends Mike and Dave. Dave like play soccer too, but he can't play basketball. Mike like basketball, but he can't play ping-pong.

Corrected essay:
Gao Feng is a soccer fan. He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' pictures. But he never plays soccer. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Dave likes to play soccer too, but he can't play basketball. Mike likes basketball, but he can't play ping-pong.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: GaoFen is a soccer fan.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng is a soccer fan.
error: GaoFen
correction: Gao Feng
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the prompt, the Chinese name is “高峰”, which transliterates to “Gao Feng” in Pinyin. 〈Fen〉 should be 『Feng』 to match the prompt and correct Pinyin spelling rules; therefore, it should be 『Gao Feng』 to comply with English writing conventions; ② Spelling Error: Chinese names in English should separate the surname and given name according to standard Pinyin format; thus, 〈GaoFen〉 is corrected to 『Gao Feng』.
error_sentence: He has four soccers and many soccer stars pictures.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' pictures.
error: soccers
correction: soccer balls
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the prompt, this refers to “4个足球” (four footballs), requiring a plural countable noun. 〈soccer〉 is an uncountable noun for the sport and has no plural form; the word “ball” must be added to specify the physical object. Thus, 〈soccers〉 is incorrect and should be changed to 『soccer balls』 to clearly refer to footballs.
error_sentence: He has four soccers and many soccer stars pictures.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and many soccer stars' pictures.
correction: '
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Possessive Error: According to the prompt, this means “很多球星的照片” (many pictures of soccer stars), requiring the possessive form to indicate ownership. According to English grammar rules, the possessive of a plural noun ending in “s” is formed by adding only an apostrophe 『'』. Therefore, 〈stars〉 should be changed to 『stars’』 to follow English grammar rules.
error_sentence: But he never play soccer.
correct_sentence: But he never plays soccer.
error: play
correction: plays
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the third-person singular subject 〈he〉 requires the third-person singular verb form. The base form 〈play〉 should be changed to the simple present third-person singular form 『plays』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.
error_sentence: He has two friends Mike and Dave.
correct_sentence: He has two friends, Mike and Dave.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English syntax rules, the appositive 〈Mike and Dave〉, which provides additional explanation, should be separated from the preceding noun 〈friends〉 by a comma. A comma 『,』 should be added after 〈friends〉 to set off the appositive, following English punctuation rules.
error_sentence: Dave like play soccer too, but he can't play basketball.
correct_sentence: Dave likes to play soccer too, but he can't play basketball.
error: like
correction: likes to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The third-person singular subject 〈Dave〉 requires the third-person singular verb form; 〈like〉 should be changed to the simple present third-person singular form 『likes』 for subject-verb agreement; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar, the structure "like to do something" is used; the verb 〈likes〉 should be followed by the infinitive form of the verb. Therefore, the base form 〈play〉 should be changed to 『to play』.
error_sentence: Mike like basketball, but he can't play ping-pong.
correct_sentence: Mike likes basketball, but he can't play ping-pong.
error: like
correction: likes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the third-person singular subject 〈Mike〉 requires the third-person singular verb form. The base form 〈like〉 should be changed to the simple present third-person singular form 『likes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.