Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. It is 3 PM. Based on the information provided below about Linda, use the present continuous tense to describe what Linda sees and hears at the mall:
Writing hints:
A little girl: buy some food
A young lady: look at a dress
Linda's mother: try on the shoes
Linda's father: stay on the sofa; wait for

Student essay:
It's 3:00, Linda is in a shop hall, she sees a little girl is buying some food, she sees a young lady is looking at a pretty dress. Look at the shoes shop! Who's that woman? Haha, she is Linda's mother. She's trying the shoes. Linda's father is staying the sofa, he is waiting for Linda's mother.

Corrected essay:
It's 3:00 p.m., Linda is in a shopping hall, and she sees a little girl buying some food. She sees a young lady looking at a pretty dress. Look at the shoe shop! Who's that woman? Haha, she is Linda's mother. She's trying on the shoes. Linda's father is staying on the sofa. He is waiting for Linda's mother.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: It's 3:00, Linda is in a shop hall, she sees a little girl is buying some food, she sees a young lady is looking at a pretty dress.
correct_sentence: It's 3:00 p.m., Linda is in a shopping hall, and she sees a little girl buying some food.
correction: p.m.
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Noun Error: According to English time expression format standards, when indicating afternoon time, writing only 〈3:00〉 is incomplete; 『p.m.』 needs to be added to specify it's afternoon time. The time expression 〈3:00〉 in the original sentence lacks 『p.m.』, not conforming to standard time format requirements, and should be changed to 『3:00 p.m.』 to standardize the time expression.
error_sentence: It's 3:00, Linda is in a shop hall, she sees a little girl is buying some food, she sees a young lady is looking at a pretty dress.
correct_sentence: It's 3:00 p.m., Linda is in a shopping hall, and she sees a little girl buying some food.
error: shop
correction: shopping
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to English expression habits, 〈shop〉 usually refers to a specific store, while when describing a large shopping venue 'hall', 『shopping』 is commonly used with 〈hall〉 to form the compound noun 『shopping hall』. The phrase 〈shop hall〉 in the original sentence does not conform to English idiomatic expression; 〈shop〉 should be changed to 『shopping』 to form 『shopping hall』, making the meaning accurate and conforming to English language norms.
error_sentence: It's 3:00, Linda is in a shop hall, she sees a little girl is buying some food, she sees a young lady is looking at a pretty dress.
correct_sentence: It's 3:00 p.m., Linda is in a shopping hall, and she sees a little girl buying some food.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, the clauses 〈Linda is in a shopping hall〉 and 〈she sees a little girl is buying some food〉 in the original sentence are coordinate clauses. Separating them only with a comma constitutes a comma splice, leading to an improper sentence structure. The conjunction 『and』 should be added after 『shopping hall』 to connect the clauses, making the sentence structure correct and the meaning coherent.
error_sentence: It's 3:00, Linda is in a shop hall, she sees a little girl is buying some food, she sees a young lady is looking at a pretty dress.
correct_sentence: It's 3:00 p.m., Linda is in a shopping hall, and she sees a little girl buying some food.
error: is
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: In the original phrase 〈a little girl is buying〉, the word 〈is〉 is redundant. In the structure 'sees sb. doing sth.', an auxiliary 'be' verb is not needed. Deleting 〈is〉 and changing it to 『a little girl buying some food』 conforms to the concise expression requirement for the present participle after perception verbs.
error_sentence: It's 3:00, Linda is in a shop hall, she sees a little girl is buying some food, she sees a young lady is looking at a pretty dress.
correct_sentence: It's 3:00 p.m., Linda is in a shopping hall, and she sees a little girl buying some food. She sees a young lady looking at a pretty dress.
error: , she
correction: . She
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent clauses cannot be joined solely by a comma, as this causes sentence structure confusion. In the original sentence, 〈Linda is in a shopping hall〉 and 〈she sees a little girl is buying some food〉 are two independent clauses and cannot be connected by a comma. 〈, she〉 should be changed to 『. She』, using a period to separate the two independent clauses, making the sentence structure correct; ② Case Error: According to English writing rules, the first letter of the first word in a sentence must be capitalized. In the original sentence, the subject 〈she〉 of the subsequent clause 〈she sees a little girl is buying some food〉 is at the beginning of the sentence, and its first letter should be capitalized. The lowercase 〈she〉 should be changed to uppercase 『She』 to comply with English writing conventions.
error_sentence: It's 3:00, Linda is in a shop hall, she sees a little girl is buying some food, she sees a young lady is looking at a pretty dress.
correct_sentence: She sees a young lady looking at a pretty dress.
error: is
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: In the original phrase 〈a young lady is looking〉, the word 〈is〉 is redundant. In the structure 'sees sb. doing sth.', an auxiliary 'be' verb is not needed. 〈is〉 should be deleted, changing it to 『a young lady looking at a pretty dress』, conforming to the concise expression requirement for the present participle after perception verbs.
error_sentence: Look at the shoes shop!
correct_sentence: Look at the shoe shop!
error: shoes
correction: shoe
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, in the compound noun 〈shoe shop〉, the modifier is usually in singular form. In the original sentence, 〈shoes〉 is plural, which does not conform to the idiomatic expression for 'shoe shop'. 〈shoes〉 should be changed to the singular form 『shoe』 to form 『shoe shop』, making the expression conform to English language habits.
error_sentence: She's trying the shoes.
correct_sentence: She's trying on the shoes.
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, when the verb 〈try〉 means 'to put on clothing to see if it fits', it needs to be paired with the preposition 『on』 to form the fixed phrase 'try on'. The original sentence lacks the preposition 『on』 after 〈trying〉, resulting in an incomplete and inaccurate expression. 『on』 should be added after 〈trying〉 to form 『trying on the shoes』, making the sentence conform to the correct expression for 'trying on shoes'.
error_sentence: Linda's father is staying the sofa, he is waiting for Linda's mother.
correct_sentence: Linda's father is staying on the sofa.
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb 'stay' is followed by the location 'the sofa', the preposition 『on』 is needed to connect them and indicate the specific position. The original sentence lacks the preposition 『on』 after 〈staying〉, resulting in an incomplete and inaccurate expression. The preposition 『on』 should be added after 〈staying〉 to form 『staying on the sofa』, making the sentence conform to correct grammatical expression and clarifying the positional information 'staying on the sofa'.
error_sentence: Linda's father is staying the sofa, he is waiting for Linda's mother.
correct_sentence: Linda's father is staying on the sofa. He is waiting for Linda's mother.
error: , he
correction: . He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈Linda's father is staying on the sofa〉 and 〈he is waiting for Linda's mother〉 are two independent clauses and cannot be joined solely by a comma. Using a comma in the original sentence causes sentence structure confusion. 〈, he〉 should be changed to 『. He』, using a period to separate the two independent clauses, making the sentence structure correct; ② Case Error: In English, the first letter of the first word in a sentence must be capitalized. In the original sentence, the subject 〈he〉 of the second independent clause is at the beginning of the sentence, and its first letter should be capitalized. The lowercase 〈he〉 should be changed to uppercase 『He』 to comply with English writing conventions.