Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
Gao Fen is a soccer fans. He has four soccers and he has so many soccer star's picture. He never play soccer. He only watch match on TV. He has two friends Mike and Dave

Corrected essay:
Gao Feng is a soccer fan. He has four soccer balls and he has so many soccer stars' pictures. He never plays soccer. He only watches matches on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Gao Fen is a soccer fans.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng is a soccer fan.
error: Fen
correction: Feng
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the 'Basic Rules of Chinese Pinyin Orthography' and standards for English translation of Chinese names, the correct Pinyin spelling for the Chinese name 高峰 should be 『Feng』. The original spelling 〈Fen〉 lacks the final 'g', distorting the pronunciation, and needs correction to 『Feng』 to ensure accuracy.
error_sentence: Gao Fen is a soccer fans.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng is a soccer fan.
error: fans
correction: fan
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, the subject 〈Gao Feng〉 is third-person singular, so the predicate noun must agree in number. The original sentence uses the plural noun 〈fans〉, which violates subject-verb agreement principles; it should be changed to the singular form 『fan』 to ensure grammatical correctness.
error_sentence: He has four soccers and he has so many soccer star's picture.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and he has so many soccer stars' pictures.
error: soccers
correction: soccer balls
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to English noun usage rules, 〈soccer〉 as the name of a sport is an uncountable noun and cannot directly take a plural suffix. To refer to the physical objects, the compound noun 『soccer balls』 should be used instead of the incorrect form 〈soccers〉, to comply with English collocations and countable/uncountable noun usage norms.
error_sentence: He has four soccers and he has so many soccer star's picture.
correct_sentence: He has four soccer balls and he has so many soccer stars' pictures.
error: star's picture
correction: stars' pictures
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Possessive Error: According to English grammar rules, when expressing the possessive relationship of multiple soccer stars, the plural noun 〈stars〉 should be converted to the possessive form 『stars'』 (plural noun adds an apostrophe), not the singular form 〈star's〉 (singular noun adds 's). Therefore, it is changed to 『stars'』 to accurately reflect the plural possessive structure; ② Noun Number Error: Based on the sentence's logic, when describing multiple photos, the plural countable noun 『pictures』 should be used instead of the singular form 〈picture〉. Since the number of photos is plural, it is changed to 『pictures』 to align with the grammatical rule of matching noun number with semantics.
error_sentence: He never play soccer.
correct_sentence: He never plays soccer.
error: play
correction: plays
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the English grammar rule for third-person singular, the subject 〈He〉 is a singular pronoun, and its predicate verb must take the third-person singular form. The original sentence uses the base form 〈play〉, which violates subject-verb agreement; it should be changed to 『plays』 to ensure grammatical accuracy.
error_sentence: He only watch match on TV.
correct_sentence: He only watches matches on TV.
error: watch match
correction: watches matches
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: Continuing the third-person singular rule, the predicate verb corresponding to the subject 〈He〉 requires morphological change. The original sentence uses the base form 〈watch〉; it should be adjusted to the third-person singular form 『watches』 to comply with the grammatical norm that verbs add -s/-es when the subject is third-person singular; ② Noun Number Error: According to the principle of noun number consistency in English, when generally referring to multiple soccer games, the plural form 『matches』 should be used. The original singular form 〈match〉 fails to convey the concept of quantity; it is changed to the plural form to match the semantic need for 'multiple games' and conform to countable noun plural usage rules.
error_sentence: He has two friends Mike and Dave
correct_sentence: He has two friends, Mike and Dave.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation norms, when the appositive 〈Mike and Dave〉 is used to specify the preceding noun 〈friends〉, a comma should be added before the appositive for separation 『friends, 』. Therefore, it is changed to 『friends, Mike and Dave』 to comply with the punctuation rule that core components of the main clause and supplementary elements should be separated by a comma.
error_sentence: He has two friends Mike and Dave
correct_sentence: He has two friends, Mike and Dave.
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: Based on the requirement for sentence structure completeness in English, a declarative sentence must end with a terminal punctuation mark. The original sentence lacks end punctuation; a period needs to be added 『Mike and Dave.』 to form a complete syntactic structure, ensuring compliance with English writing conventions.