Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. It is 3 PM. Based on the information provided below about Linda, use the present continuous tense to describe what Linda sees and hears at the mall:
Writing hints:
A little girl: buy some food
A young lady: look at a dress
Linda's mother: try on the shoes
Linda's father: stay on the sofa; wait for

Student essay:
At p.m 3:00, I'm walk in the shopping and see some interesting things. First, I'm seeing a little girl is buying some food. Second, I'm looking a young lady is looking at a dress. What's more, Linda's mother is trying the shoes was looked by my own eyes. Finally, I see Lina' fther is staying on the sofa and seem to wait some bady. The day is really interesting so I want to share with you.

Corrected essay:
At 3:00 p.m., I walked into the shopping mall and saw some interesting things. First, I saw a little girl buying some food. Second, I saw a young lady looking at a dress. What's more, Linda's mother was trying on the shoes, which I saw myself. Finally, I saw Linda's father staying on the sofa and seeming to be waiting for somebody. The day is really interesting so I want to share it with you.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: At p.m 3:00, I'm walk in the shopping and see some interesting things.
correct_sentence: At 3:00 p.m., I walked into the shopping mall and saw some interesting things.
error: p.m 3:00
correction: 3:00 p.m.
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Order Error: According to English expression norms, 'p.m.' should be placed after the numerical time in time expressions. The word order in 〈p.m 3:00〉 is incorrect and should be changed to 『3:00 p.m.』 to conform to English writing conventions.
error_sentence: At p.m 3:00, I'm walk in the shopping and see some interesting things.
correct_sentence: At 3:00 p.m., I walked into the shopping mall and saw some interesting things.
error: 'm walk in
correction: walked into
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence describes a past event and should use the past tense. The original 〈I'm walk〉 is in the present tense, and the combination of auxiliary 〈'm〉 and verb 〈walk〉 is incorrect; it should be changed to the past tense 『walked』 to match the past tense; ② Preposition Error: When the verb 〈walk〉 is followed by a location to mean 'enter', the preposition 'into' is commonly used. The original 〈walk in〉 lacks a location object and the preposition is inappropriate; 〈in〉 should be changed to 『into』, forming 'walked into' to express the action of entering the mall.
error_sentence: At p.m 3:00, I'm walk in the shopping and see some interesting things.
correct_sentence: At 3:00 p.m., I walked into the shopping mall and saw some interesting things.
error: and see
correction: mall and saw
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to English expression habits, using 'shopping' alone is incomplete; it forms the fixed phrase 'shopping mall' with 'mall' to mean 'shopping center'. The original 〈the shopping〉 lacks 'mall' and should be supplemented as 『shopping mall』 for complete and accurate expression; ② Verb Tense Error: The sentence overall describes a past event, so the main verb tense needs to be consistent. The original 〈see〉 is in the present tense, which does not fit the past tense context, and should be changed to the past tense 『saw』 to meet the tense requirement for describing past events.
error_sentence: First, I'm seeing a little girl is buying some food.
correct_sentence: First, I saw a little girl buying some food.
error: 'm seeing
correction: saw
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context of the sentence describing a past event, the main verb should use the past tense. The original 〈I'm seeing〉 is in the present continuous tense, which does not meet the requirement of the past tense, and should be changed to the past tense 『saw』 to be consistent with the time background of the context.
error_sentence: First, I'm seeing a little girl is buying some food.
correct_sentence: First, I saw a little girl buying some food.
error: is
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, the expression for 'see sb. doing sth.' is used here. In 〈is buying〉, 'is' is redundant and should be deleted to make the sentence structure correct.
error_sentence: Second, I'm looking a young lady is looking at a dress.
correct_sentence: Second, I saw a young lady looking at a dress.
error: 'm looking
correction: saw
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context that the sentence describes a past event, the main verb needs to use the past tense. The original 〈I'm looking〉 is in the present continuous tense, which does not fit the past time background described by the sentence; 〈'm looking〉 should be changed to the simple past tense 『saw』 to ensure tense consistency and make the sentence meet the context requirements.
error_sentence: Second, I'm looking a young lady is looking at a dress.
correct_sentence: Second, I saw a young lady looking at a dress.
error: is
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, the expression for 'see sb. doing sth.' is used here. In 〈is looking〉, 'is' is redundant and should be deleted to make the sentence structure correct.
error_sentence: What's more, Linda's mother is trying the shoes was looked by my own eyes.
correct_sentence: What's more, Linda's mother was trying on the shoes, which I saw myself.
error: is trying
correction: was trying on
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence describes a past event and should use the past tense. The original 〈is trying〉 is in the present tense, inconsistent with the overall tense; 〈is〉 should be changed to the past tense 『was』 for tense unification; ② Preposition Error: When 'try' means 'to try on', it is often paired with 'on'. The original 〈try the shoes〉 is incomplete in meaning and lacks a preposition; 『on』 should be added to form 'try on the shoes', indicating the complete action of trying on.
error_sentence: What's more, Linda's mother is trying the shoes was looked by my own eyes.
correct_sentence: What's more, Linda's mother was trying on the shoes, which I saw myself.
error: was looked by my own eyes
correction: , which I saw myself
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Voice Error: According to the meaning, the original sentence intends to express 'I saw it with my own eyes', but 〈was looked by my own eyes〉 is in the passive voice, which does not fit the semantics of active observation. It should be changed to the active structure 『I saw myself』 for accurate semantic expression; ② Sentence Structure Error: The structure 〈was looked by my own eyes〉 is repetitive in English; 'looked' itself means 'to see', and adding 'by my own eyes' is redundant. Furthermore, this structure does not conform to common English expression habits, causing confusing sentence structure and awkward expression. It should be modified to the relative clause structure 『which I saw myself』, where 'which' refers to the preceding 'Linda's mother was trying on the shoes', and 'I saw myself' clearly indicates 'I saw it with my own eyes', making the logical relationship clear, the expression concise and natural, and conforming to English grammar and expression habits.
error_sentence: Finally, I see Lina' fther is staying on the sofa and seem to wait some bady.
correct_sentence: Finally, I saw Linda's father staying on the sofa and seeming to be waiting for somebody.
error: see Lina' fther is
correction: saw Linda's father
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: The sentence describes a past event, so the verb needs to be in the past tense. The original 〈see〉 is in the present tense, which does not fit the context, and should be changed to the past tense 『saw』 to meet the requirement for describing past events; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it intends to express 'Linda's father'. 〈Lina’ fther〉 is misspelled; 〈Lina’〉 should be changed to the possessive form 『Linda's』, and 〈fther〉 should be changed to 『father』 to conform to standard spelling; ③ Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, the expression for 'see sb. doing sth.' is used here. In 〈is staying on the sofa〉, 'is' is redundant and should be deleted to make the sentence structure correct.
error_sentence: Finally, I see Lina' fther is staying on the sofa and seem to wait some bady.
correct_sentence: Finally, I saw Linda's father staying on the sofa and seeming to be waiting for somebody.
error: seem to wait some bady
correction: seeming to be waiting for somebody
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, verb forms in parallel structures need to be consistent. The original uses the present participle 〈staying〉 before, so the following 〈seem〉 should be changed to the present participle form 『seeming』 to maintain structural consistency; ② Verb Choice Error: 'seem to' expresses 'appear to be doing something', and should be followed by the infinitive progressive; therefore, 'wait' should be changed to 'be waiting'; ③ Preposition Error: When 'wait' means 'to await', it is an intransitive verb and needs the preposition 'for' before an object. The original 〈wait some bady〉 lacks a preposition; 『for』 should be added after 〈wait〉 to form 'wait for somebody', making the expression complete; ④ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it intends to express 'somebody'. 〈bady〉 is misspelled and should be changed to 『somebody』 to conform to standard spelling.
error_sentence: The day is really interesting so I want to share with you.
correct_sentence: The day is really interesting so I want to share it with you.
correction: it
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English grammar rules, the verb 〈share〉 is a transitive verb and requires an object. The original 〈share with you〉 lacks an object, making the content being shared unclear; the pronoun 『it』 should be added to refer to 〈the day〉 mentioned earlier, making the sentence structure complete and the meaning clear.