Before revision: For example , Pakistani President Asif Ali Zardari's "private spiritual journey" to India to visit Dargah Ajmer Sharif, ended with acceptance by Indian Prime Minister Manmohan Singh to travel to Pakistan.
After revision: Another example is Pakistani President Asif Ali Zardari's "private spiritual journey" to India to visit Dargah Ajmer Sharif, ended with acceptance by Indian Prime Minister Manmohan Singh to travel to Pakistan.