Before revision: The industrial revolution changed advertising from informative flyers marketing the availability of goods in 17th and 18th century Europe, whose audience was those who lived and worked in proximity to the vendors and their wares, to multimillion-dollar campaigns that attempted to instantly connect and persuade peoples from across the world.
After revision: The industrial revolution changed advertising from informative flyers marketing the availability of goods in 17th and 18th century Europe, whose audience was those who lived and worked in proximity to the vendors and their wares, to multi-million-dollar campaigns that attempted to instantly connect and persuade peoples from across the world.