Before revision: Traits This type of character is typically represented as a kind and wise , older father-type figure who uses personal knowledge of people and the world to help tell stories and offer guidance that , in a mystical way , may impress upon his audience a sense of who they are and who they might become, thereby acting as a mentor.
After revision: Traits This type of character is typically represented as a kind and wise elderly father figure who uses personal knowledge of people and the world to help tell stories and offer guidance that may in a mystical way impress upon his audience a sense of who they are and who they might become, thereby acting as a mentor.