Before revision: Charles Hoskins had previously been with Twyford Seeds and spent twelve years as General Manager of Conder Seeds having under the directorship of his brother Peter Hoskins been responsible for the inception of this profitable and successful business.
After revision: Charles Hoskins had previously been with Twyford Seeds and spent twelve years as General Manager of Conder Seeds having under the directorship of his brother Peter Hoskins been responsible for the inception of this successful and profitable business.