joshbuddy, with due respect, this makes the third time you have essentially proffered the same complaint. Not to mention my replies to other participants here, above I provided a fairly detailed response to your opinion, specifically in reply to you—twice. Yet you have failed to do the courtesy of responding, except by repeating essentially the same thing. 

If you have something specific in mind, please spit it out. Otherwise why do you keep making the same remarks? My opinion is that the lead-in complies with Wikipedia’s guideline, and that it does so beautifully. So both of us have expressed an opinion. So what? Only one of us has taken the time to explain ourselves beyond stating an opinion. This is the talk page. If you want to talk then please get on with it.

If you want to get on track I recommend responding to the plethora of commentary already generated on the subject. Since my edits are the subject at issue, then I further suggest you get on track by responding to my replies.