Hi — Love to help out with DoubIndemn 

Yeah, it's a drag there isn't a line of people wanting to help out with this great picture. I don't understand it; a whole lot of lesser pictures have crowds all bumping each other, wanting to edit.

My first comment to my (brand-new) collaborator is that your intro rewrite struck me as being a tad too beefy. Wait a day or two, then look back and see if a little of the background of the actual case, (para 3) might not go better a little further down. Likewise, I might trim para 4 some; I think the real standout item there is the L of C "significant" deeming in 1992. I try to keep leads as pared down as possible. (These were my thoughts when I first was checking out your edit, BTW, before I got your note).

Hope it's okay to write directly (a less-blunt way of saying bluntly) about stuff like this — I hope you'll be just as blunt back!

I'll give the article a better read in the morning when my eyeballs aren't hanging down the front of my face.

Nice to "meet" you — I'm looking forward to this! —