"The evenings television biography" needs to be "the biography which was shown on television on the day of his death". I know this information is in a previous section, but readers don't necessarily read all the sections, or read them in the right order, in which case it's a difficult phrase to understand. Also it needs an apostrophe, and put the bit about the chefs with the kind words being the same ones he had called "cunts" back in, please, I liked it. 81.131.65.164