That was my point. I wanted to rewrite the entire plot in a detailed, dramatic, and descriptive manner, so we could trim it afterwards using precision and structure, resulting in a concise summary that contained all notable details required to make a good plot. The way it is now would be a great plot for a movie, but since it's for a video game, I thought it would be best to start off powerful, then work our way down to make it as concise as the plot seen for Arkham City. The current plot is by no means the final plot, there's still more trimming, wiki-linking, rewording, and copy editing to do. Think about it in a reader's perspective, which of the two points you've made up there capture your attention more? We still have work to do. I'm sure this will have a great result at the end. -