About your improvements; good work, in general. I am still feeling lost about the description of Henry Cow's music being 'intense', a change from 'intensities'. Any music can be 'intense' for an aficionado. Me, I think Frith is intense. D ... Something more descriptive is needed.
Regarding the presence of Beppe Colli, I do not see his notability, and the web magazine Clouds and Clocks is not mentioned elsewhere, by other media sources. When I Google "clouds and clocks", I get a 1965 lecture on rationality by Sir Karl Raimund Popper, and I get a children's book on encopresis, the soiling of pants. Similarly, Beppe Colli does not get mentioned elsewhere. The man and the website are not notable.
Applying the same criteria to Babyblaue Seiten and the German reviewer Achim Breiling, I find that Breiling is a medical researcher who has published papers about genes, proteins and cloning, and has written prog rock reviews for the New Gibraltar Encyclopedia of Music in addition to a bunch of them at Babyblaue. CDBaby lists Babyblaue Seiten as a source, and an article exists about that review site in the German Wikipedia. It looks like Breiling in Babyblaue is somewhat more reliable a source than Colli in Clouds. Although Colli's observations are interesting, I cannot see keeping them. It's too bad, because he is the only reviewer who hinted at the CD having some loudness war characteristics, a step down from the dynamic spaciousness of the LP.
About the "bursts with" quote from van Peer, the word 'eradicates' was wrong. Van Peer wrote 'eradiates', which is not a word, but he may have intended this construction as a neologism. That, or he misspelled 'radiates'. In any event, I returned 'eradiates' to the article, and added a [sic] template.