I must admit, that first paragraph is oodles more interesting, but it's totally fruity. Or is it nutty? Whatever the case, it smacks of granola. (I hope you can take that with a sense of humor.)

All I want is for the article to be specific and comprehensible. BFI'm not talking about presenting lots of different points of view, I'm just saying that to describe New Age we can't use New Age language, because you get trapped in a circle of self-reference. I know that you may feel that traditional forms of language don't properly express the sense of New Age, but the trick is to start from a common foundation, then build towards the vision, not start from the vision. The rapture of instant enlightenment can't (shouldn't?) come from an encyclopedia; rather, it may complement and guide the experience.

TheCunctator