NO. The current version accurately and in an appropriately neutral manner, represents the actual content of the source material.  These proposals are neither neutral nor encyclopedic. The guidelines of WP:BLP require that the source material be accurately represented with neither overstatement nor understatement.  These proposals, by grossly understating the source material, misprepresent and distort it. "Neutralizing" an article, to use CP's term, is a very different thing from an article being neutral.  It is improper for an editor, by "neutralizing" either positive or negative material about a subject, to misrepresent an misconstrue the source references.  I am also deeply disturbed that, after this matter was taken to the BLP Noticeboard and the uninvolved editors commented that the current text is perfectly appropriate, that this group of editors has decided that they will simply ignore that input.