Of the three versions, I like KVL's proposed text the best, followed by Thompsma's. Although Mauna's text is simpler, the wording in several sentences is a little awkward. While I agree with Maunus's sentiment that the texts by KVL and Thompsma are a little dense, I think the best solution would be to "divide up" a few of the sentences and pace ourselves a little bit. Both versions seemed "a little rushed."