:::::I take no offense. I had for a few days wanted to see if anyone could get something concrete, and after a few days of a lot of off-the-cuff back and forth (not between me so much but others), I felt the train was moving everywhere but on the track. Arguably the only valuable item I've seen posted to this talk page in recent days was the IP user's bullet point list. I replied to it but seems others thought it was too detailed to comment (I've always wondered why people are afraid of long passages if it's to-the-point, with little to no attempts at even dissecting one of the bullet points, but I digress). The proposal I offered was wordy  agreed. It's grammar was imprecise and imperfect. "Their race" was referring to "AA" stated previously in the sentence, but I can see how it does not sound inclusive and find that a very good "catch" by you. No need to be gentle with the criticism boy-oh, or girl-oh, come at it with full gusto! With the first sentence you critiqued, I was essentially trying to say inclusion is not by means of a popularity contest; the list will contain names perhaps one has never come across but that does not mean what they did was any less historic than what someone in the pop culture realm may have achieved (it's one of the chief reasons I am not a big fan of utilizing one individual's accomplishment in the lead as the example, as I believe it puts undue weight on one listing (this comes from someone who has helped edit the Jackie Robinson, Larry Doby, Baseball color line, Effa Manley, Branch Rickey, etc. articles)). If you see me as a "serious and sincere individual" it is because I like to think I am one. I would also like to add that shortly after I posted the first version, I went to about 6-8 different WikiProject pages in hopes of gaining a few opinions. Nearly 12 hours has passed and I'm not sure if there are any new eyes, but hope is not lost. Please put your writing strengths to good use. I think we're both more in line with one another than you might think. (Also, please note I have responded to your other thread (above)) and am hoping for a response on that item, as well).