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 Hi! I've been assigned to edit your group's contribution to the wikipedia page. As a whole, you guys did a great job. The edits you added to the prognosis section fit perfectly and highlight the struggles of communication post-stroke. I just have a couple suggestions. 

 Suggestion #1 
 I was looking at the Rehabilitation section of the article and in the fourth paragraph (right at the bottom) it mentions speech and language therapy. There isn’t a lot of information in this section but based your summaries I think you guys could add to it.  

 Lydia’s first summary mentions prosody. Although this isn’t listed as one of the speech disorders that could receive speech therapy I think you could put it in (from what I can see from Lydia’s description of prosody it is very similar to Shawna’s description of dysarthria which is listed so I think it would make sense to add it). Besides that, maybe you guys could discuss what communication barriers stroke victims face before the speech therapy (frustration, trouble with self identity etc.) and then the improvements that are seen after (I’m not sure if you resources include this but if they discuss therapy I’d think the outcomes would be there somewhere).  

 You could also go into a brief explanation of what some forms of speech therapy are. I know that Shawna mentioned aphasia in her first summary. This would give people some insight as to what these victims must overcome to regain their communication abilities. 

 Suggestion #2 
 This time I was looking at the Prognosis section of the article.   

 There is a piece about emotional lability of stroke survivors. This means that patients tend to flip around in their emotions. I noticed that Lydia’s first summary talked about how strokes can cause changes in emotional behavior. You (Lydia) provide a list of emotions and then say, “these primary emotions tend to be affected by the deficits in emotion communication …”. Are they affected in the way that the Wikipedia article describes emotional lability (crying when happy etc.)? If so, you could contribute a bit more information about those emotional changes. 

 Also, another thing that could be edited in that paragraph it the last sentence that says, “Some patients show the opposite of what they feel, for example crying when they are happy”. You guys could discuss how this incorrect expression of emotion is frustrating and how that acts as a barrier to their commutation. Shawna’s fourth summary is about the experiences of stroke survivors so you could find a story where one of them talked about going through this struggle. 

 Suggestion #3  
 My final suggestion is on the topic of the relationship between the client and the health care professional. Both Lydia and Shawna had a summary on how the poor communication between clients and HCP professionals can cause clients to be scared and stressed which ultimately hinders their recovery. This doesn’t really fit too too well anywhere but if you put it as a small sub heading underneath the rehabilitation section it could act as a warning to patients and a reminder to HCPs that a lack of communication is not beneficial to the healing process. I think that this would be a good place to incorporate it be rehabilitation is all about clients working with health care professionals to improve their health (which could in fact be hindered if proper communication doesn’t occur). Just a thought. 

 Wording and Sentence Structure Suggestions 

 1. Sg13vp’s Final Edit: Sentence structure in the first sentence 

 Original: Disruption in self-identity, relationships with others, and emotional well-being are sometimes social consequences after stroke due to the lack of ability to communicate. 

 Correction/Comment: I find that “sometimes” is a bit awkward. Maybe replace it with “some of the social consequences…” or “can lead to”. Also, is it a consequence? Are they being punished? Maybe a word like “social difficulties” or “social barriers” would be a better fit. 

 2. Sg13vp’s Final Edit: Wording in the second sentences. 

 Original: Many patients who experience communication impairments after a stroke find it more difficult to cope with the social issues rather than physical impairments. 

 Correction/Comment: Just some picky wording corrections: I find the word “issues” to be quite broad. Maybe use the word “implications"" instead. So the sentence would be something like, “…more difficult to cope with the social implications than the physical ones”. 

 3. Sg13vp’s Final Edit: Wording in the third sentence 

 Original: Wider aspects of care must address the emotional impact speech… 

 Correction/Comment: The third sentence is started with the word “Wider”. I think that “broader” would flow a bit better. 
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