:Hi. I can't seem to find the quotations "brutally raped", "they forced themselves on her", "she was forced to have sex against her will" in the article. It is noted in the lede that "The victim was transported, undressed, photographed, and sexually assaulted. She was also penetrated vaginally by other students' fingers, an act defined as rape under Ohio law".  
 :- I can't find the quotations: "peed on", "ejaculated on", "dragged around", except two uses of "peed on" when a source was being directly quoted. 
 :- The word "unconscious" is used in a factual manner in the article, and "forced to go with them" and "unable to move" do not appear. As stated in the article "The judge set the minimum sentence of one year for Richmond, who was found guilty of using his fingers to penetrate the girl while she was unconscious. Mays, who was found guilty of penetrating the girl while she was unconscious and disseminating pornographic pictures of her, was given the minimum sentence of two years." 
 :This all seems to follow Wikipedia policy, so I'm not sure what you're planning on rewriting in the article. I don't believe that you are presenting any facts here: the article seems to be fairly NPOV.