:OK, I will be happy to go over it.  How would you like me to do it?  One thing that occurs to me is to copy the whole thing to another sandbox in your userspace and edit it like I would if it were in article space with edit summaries and so on, and we can talk about it on the talk page of the copy as if it were in article space.  If we get that version good and ready you can move it into article space.  Another possibility is for me to make comments on the talk page of your sandbox version and you can make the edits.  The first seems easier to me for me because I think better when I'm actually editing, but it's up to you.  Maybe some other method?—