:I have fixed the above issues (for the most part), but not without pause.  See, I don't that it's always necessary to have an inline ref for every single quote or thought.  I think that the reader is smarter than that.  For example, the paragraph about the similes.  I think that the reader's gonna know that all those words and phrases surrounded by quotation marks were originally Lupton's thoughts.  As it is now, the five [14]s in the paragraph look ridiculous, but I changed it because I believe in following the suggestions of my reviewers.  BTW, the "merry like Christmas" isn't a quote; it's an evocation of the title.