:Ok, I've read through the article (took a whole hour, you've got a heck of a lot of info there) and made some changes where I thought appropriate. For the clear majority of the article, it seems fine to me. There's only one line I still don't like: the opening line of the second paragraph in the plot section "The Enterprise rendezvous with Gorkon's battlecruiser peacefully and proceed to Earth when the Enterprise suddenly appears to fire upon the unguarded Klingon ship with a pair of torpedoes" - the first part just doesn't flow well to me. I tried replacing that with "The Enterprise rendezvous peacefully with Gorkon's battlecruiser and proceeds towards Earth..." but I'm not fond of that either. Other than that, I'm fine with the rest. And where's the logic in filming an ice planet scene on San Fransciso beach?