::* "One of her primary intentions is to make a case for how little these companies put back into society, even compared with the exploitative mill-owners and plutocrats of Victorian times." - Assumes it is true, and that she just intends to make a case for it. Calls mill-owners and exploitative which is POV in itself. 
 ::* "And at the retail end of the supply chain, she draws attention to the widespread use of part-time, minimum wage workers performing what she refers to as McJobs" - This sounds, especially in context, like something very bad, and there is no "she believes" or anything abut it. The fact that there is no description of why it would be bad just makes it worse. It's a weasly sentence, that by itself and out of context sounds neutral, but in fact is very POV, as it implies that it is somebodies fault that the situation is, and that it is like that because somebody is intentionally evil and could do something about it. In fact, unskilled jobs *should* be minimum-wage. There is. after all, no skill involved. And the lack of unskilled jobs in fact only means that unskilled labor will go unemployed, and that is *not* an improvement. 
 ::* "She goes on to elucidate a number of evils which she believes originate from profit-led consumerism." - Well, if she only believes they are there, how can she elucidate them? WP:WEASEL. 
 :: In general your additions, even if they could be made NPOV, lack substance. It's just more ways to saying "She complains about corporations" without adding any substance to the argument or clarifying how or why she is criticizing it.