January 2010 (UTC) 

 You asked me (as a member of the Guild of Copy Editors) for help with copy-editing the above article. I'm afraid that as I only joined the Guild today I am not nearly experienced enough to tackle this important task. I see that you have already placed a request for help on the Guild's Project Page so hopefully someone more suited to the task will respond shortly. If this does not happen then might I suggest researching the User Pages of copy editors further down the list of Guild members and selecting one who shows good evidence of experience in this type and length of article. I've even tidied up the chronological sequence of members to help you. Good luck! 
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