*"His objective was to fight in any short engagement he could, and to become a policeman." This needs to be more clearly spelt out. I also think "police officer" would be preferable. 
 **Changed police part, but not sure how to re-phrase part 1 of the sentence. Thanks, .  
 *Years and ranks and such for the Arab Revolt info would be preferable. 
 **No info that I could find I'm afraid (searching terms such as 'Arab revolt Ernest Bond', 'Arab revolt Ernest Radcliffe Bond', and 'Arab revolt Private Ernest Bond' 
 *"After a short time in No. 8 (Guards) Commando, in a group of units under Robert Laycock's command;[2] the unit was disbanded, and he journeyed to North Africa with his original battalion in the Scots Guards,[1] fighting in the Eighth Army.[2]" This doesn't make sense 
 **Changed a little. Does it make sense now? Thanks, .  
 *"against the airfields" Targetting? Aiming to capture? "against the" doesn't say anything 
 *"He became a prisoner of war for the remainder of the conflict.[1][2]" Where was he sent? Was this the whole four years mentioned in the next (very short- to be avoided!) paragraph? 
 *"When Bond was released from his imprisonment by the Axis, he was demobilised in 1946" Clumsy wording. Was he demobilised "when ... released" or "in 1946"? 
 *"His division became 'E' division" Presumably, you mean he moved division 
 *""he began to develop a reputation for his discerning skill as a detective."" It'd be good if we could have in-text attribution for this quote. Also, be aware of MOS:LQ. 
 *"Bond joined the Bomb Squad, newly formed in January 1971[5] due to concern over The Angry Brigade,[2] Bond became the unit's first commander[5] on 23 June 1971,[3] having being promoted to that position in 1969.[1]" Comma splice 
 *"having being promoted to that position in 1969" So, while in the murder squad? Why don't you mention this in the previous paragraph? 
 *"The unit served at Tintagel House, and Bond's name was theoretically meant to be kept secret and he should be called 'Commander X', so that he was not bombed, but journalists have since claimed to have known his name within days of his appointment." Clumsy wording. The use of quotes for the remainder of the paragraph is also rather jarring in places. 
 *Perhaps "terrorist" is a word to avoid... 
 *"The gunmen gave up on 12 December,[10] their surrender sparking fears of reprisals, after what Bond called a "rather humiliating episode,"[11] Bond "masterminded" the operation to regain the hostages.[4]" I don't follow. 

 Sorry- I know this probably isn't what you wanted to hear.    
 :Well, it's best to get the news that it needs a lot of work now than nominating it then finding out. Thanks for all the help, I'll start taking a look at the issues. Thanks, .  (Oh, and before I forget, thanks for adding the cats and helping on the quote). 
 ::Template:Cite ODNB is good- it has a nice way of handling the "subscription needed" note. To be clear, this is a solid article (even if the writing's a bit all over the place in a few places) and a great topic, combining several interests of mine! However, the FA bar for biographies is very high.