I find these proposals ungrammatical and frequently inaccurate.  
 1. Use of "waning" is not normal English usage and ruins the lucid grammar of the sentence. 
 2. "Bombed" may or may not mean "abandoned" although I have some sympathy for this idea. 
 3. "Crashes". Strange usage that means nothing. 
 4. The cave paragraph proposal suffers from poor syntax. The original is clear and readable. 
 5. The paragraph on Caravaggio is not good English. 
 6. Paragraph on Geoffrey's revenge is needlessly dilatory. Just say what happens. 
 7. Same paragraph lacks knowledge of English usage, grammar, and syntax. 
 8. "The Bedouin" may be an improvement. 
 I will include the changes that work a little. Thanks for the effort.