My objections: 

 #The new version says that it was a residential area, but was merely designated as a security zone. 
 #The addition of "Palestinian territories" is somewhat gratuitous (in both versions). If you want to say where Rafah is, say it's in the West Bank. 
 #The new version wants to remove the reason she is dead viz. that she tried to obstruct a bulldozer. It didn't  suddenly turn and head in her direction and chase her down the street. Saying "interfered with" is to use a less descriptive phrase when "obstruct" is completely accurate. Why the desire to obfuscate? 
 #We don't know why she was obstructing it. The activists were there to obstruct the bulldozers, perhaps from dismantling houses, perhaps from dismantling anything, perhaps from digging up the soil. There had been no house demolitions that day even though it was already late afternoon, and the house of the physician (sometimes pharmacist) continued to be lived in for the next seven months, though that could have been because of what happened.