This love poem is better than Shakespeares sonnet 147

Hi everyone! Rebuttals Pro claimed last round that only s/he provided any examples and analysis on Dean's and Shakespeare's poems. This is obviously untrue--I have repeatedly offered in-depth examples of problems with Dean's poem and boons to Shakespeare's sonnet. I have indeed brought out examples of text, and even offered explanations of Dean's text. This will be made crystal clear in this conclusion. Furthermore, it is Pro who failed to offer any analysis on why Dean's poem is more loving or emotional. At first Pro claimed that Dean's poem was Dionysian and Shakespeare's was Apollonian, and thus Dean's poem is more sincere and emotional. I have shown that to be completely wrong. If Pro gave additional reasons for why Dean's poem is more emotional and more loving than Shakespeare's poem, then why didn't s/he identify those reasons last round? Moreover, why did Pro drop every point that I made claiming the contrary? Pro claims that I gave no examples from Sonnet 147. True, I did not quote it much, but that was because the entire sonnet is short and can be seen in round 1. That does NOT mean I did not offer examples, however! I pointed out that the madness/illness of the narrator describes the juxtaposition of rapture and helplessness in an anecdote that was CONSISTENT, as well as humerus. I pointed out that wit of the sonnet offered a respite on self reflection, allowing one to empathize with the narrator wholly--an ideal tension of Apollonian and Dionysian. I suggested that the love of the narrator was toward the beloved's whole self, and not the sum of their sexual parts/potential. Did I really not give any examples from Shakespeare's work? Pro claims that I gave no examples from Dean's poem. I believe I pointed out how the focus on the sexual parts were distracting and insincere, making it impossible to empathize fully and thus remaining in the realm of the intellectual Apollonian (which is bad). I pointed out how the style of the poem was long and scattered--different incompatible metaphors were used every line, making for a confusing overall picture. Various body parts are given different characteristics that together make nothing interesting but fancy-sounding fluff--is the female a butterfly, an opera singer, a dove, dew, or a "ghazel?" Or is she a "c*** hole?" There is an incompatibility of metaphors in Dean's work, which ruins the whole point of making metaphors. Thus, Dean's poem attempts to be fancy, but actually sounds insincere. Observe the overuse of "thee" and "thou," etc. "Oh oh give me thy soul along the flesh of I give me thy soul to make my eyes to cry my love for thee oh come beloved and make my heart to thud and my veins to sing with thy lips make my ears ring with the love thee does to I" How about a more sincere version, without a confusing overdose of "thee" and "thou"? "Offer me your bare soul on my skin, your soul that floods my eyes and pounds my heart and courts my ears and inspires my soprano veins to song" (--me). Pro's one argument against Shakespeare is that his sonnet is too "intellectual," when in fact Dean's poem attempts the same thing. Did I really give no examples? Reason to vote for Shakespeare: Plagiarism 1. Pro's whole first round was plagiarized. Apollonian/Dionesian 2. Dean's poem was Apollonian, which Pro claimed was bad. 3. In contrast, Shakespeare's sonnet contained Dionysian elements, which Pro (and Nietzsche) claimed is better. 4. Shakespeare's sonnet is able to provide passionate emotion, which Dean's poem fails to do. 5. Shakespeare's poem provides an insight into the emotional state of the narrator, and not simply their arousal (unlike Dean's). 6. Shakespeare's metaphor is consistent and depicts the love of the narrator clearly, without being mediated by self-reflection (unlike Dean's metaphors). 7. Shakespeare's poem is intellectually superior (by Pro's admission, more or less). Reduction of love/Objectification 8. Dean's poem is preoccupied with physiological arousal, and aroused body parts. This is lust, not love, and yet Dean equates the two. 9. Equating love and arousal is obviously wrong and quite dangerous. Rape can even be physiologically arousing (body parts still do their function during rape), but it is nonetheless awful and evil and painful and traumatic. 10. Dean objectifies the woman in his poem, making her nothing more than the object of and potential for sexual affection. 11. Shakespeare's poem is an ode to the person, and not their body parts. Style: 12: Dean's poem has no clear theme, but Shakespeare does (guilty love as an illness, the narrator as the foolish patient). 13. Dean's poem overdoses on 'thee' and 'thou' for no apparent reason. 14. Dean's metaphors are inconsistent and don't add anything except for perceived fanciness. 15. Shakespeare managed to say more in a few short lines with stringent meter and rhyming scheme than Dean managed in free form. 16. Dean's metaphors are cliche, whereas Shakespeare's lines still seem novel after 400+ years. Spelling/grammar 17. Dean made some spelling and grammar mistakes for no apparent reason. Pro suggested that was because the narrator was in a hurry, but in fact the narrator is supposed to be engaged in slow and sensual sex. The poem is not supposed to be rushed. However, it could be that the author was rushed, which is inexcusable next to the greatest poet of all time. Dean spelled, for example, gazelle wrong, and frequently forgot apostrophes (which does not affect the meter, although Dean did not use meter). 18. Shakespeare did not make any spelling or grammar mistakes, with every syllable being carefully measured. Objective skill: 19. Obviously, Pro and I are biased in our evaluations of the skills of Dean and Shakespeare. Therefore, we must rely on third parties. 20. Shakespeare is widely considered the greatest poet of all time. 21. Pro failed to show a single person besides her/himself who even liked Dean or his poem. Cis, straight, able, young 22. Dean's poem describes love as being inextricably connected to one's working sexual body parts, in a heterosexual way. Thus, queer people, trans* people, intersex people, disabled people, and many old people would be incapable of love within Dean's work. 23. Shakespeare's sonnet opens the door of love to most everyone, and thus better accesses love. Thus: Shakespeare's work is better written, more emotional, more loving, more intelligent, more engaging, and more critically-acclaimed than Dean's poem. Pro also plagiarized the first round. Last thing: Dean's poem isn't bad. It really isn't. However, when one claims that an amateur poem is better than Shakespeare's, one should expect to acquire some critical "bruises" along the way. Thanks for the debate, Pro!