Story Writing Debate

Chapter 4: Beginning of the end"An Army!?" Charlotte's Mom exclaimed. "How in the world did you manage to do that?"Charlotte's Dad seemed pleased with himself. "I know what he did. You went to the surrounding cities and gathered support for the war, didn't you?" I said, remembering the radio conversation I had with him.Charlotte nodded her head, in understanding.Then to every one's surprise, "Nope!" Charlotte's dad said excitedly. I didn't believe it. How could he have built an army, if he didn't recruit anyone?It was impossible.Charlotte spoke up angrily "Stop gloating dad, and just tell us what the heck you did!"Charlotte's parents, and I burst out in to raucous laughter at her outburst. Finally, as our laughter dimmed to a slight chuckle, Charlotte's Dad explained."I know some people on the inside of the city. Some people who were captured and enslaved by the authority. I had something worked out a while back, something that would help me free my wife. That was before they captured you too, though Charlotte. Anyway, I had a feeling something was wrong with the plan. That it wouldn't work, and they would punish you for my action. So after you got caught, I had to think of something... Else. I noticed how the authority had there power. They quickly achieved it because of their ability to gain access to city's, and strongholds. Nobody stood a fighting chance against them, because they could always breach a territory. But I was curious. I knew it wasn't pure raw strength that led them to these victories. I knew it was something physical, that was getting them these advantages. It was the portals."Everyone gasped as the words left his mouth. Of course it made sense. I too, had wondered how the authority managed to so easily take control of everything.He continued "We knew very little about these portals. In fact very few people have actually encountered them, or not about them. Kyle, you are one of the few."Lucky me, I thought sarcastically."I had to know what they were. How they worked. So I worked out a plan. The other night, someone I had on the inside named Raff McElder, decided to help me. He escaped from the chambers, got a weapon, and caused mayhem in the city, providing a distraction for me-"Charlotte interrupted "That was you!? We heard everything daddy! Poor Raff..."Charlotte's Dad was shocked "They caught him? What happened Charlotte! What did they do to him?"Charlotte started crying, and couldn't answer. "They shot him" I said.Tears rolled down Charlotte's Dad's eyes as he heard the grim news, and he too sobbed at the fate of his friend."She- She- You guys didn't see it- I mean... Did Charlotte-""No, we were dragged away before it happened" I said grimly.Charlotte's dad seemed relieved, but was still daunted by horrible fate of his friend. His wife put hand on his shoulder, and attempted to comfort him.Finally he continued."I snuck into the city, and got into the kings chambers. And I found something..." he then got up, and left the room leaving everyone astounded."What daddy! What did you find."A few moments later, Charlotte's Dad returned, holding a small oval object, about the size of a football. It was completely opaque, and shiny."I found this." He said, holding it up so that all the confused faces in the room could observe the object."What is it?" Charlotte's Mom asked bewildered, and entranced, by the objects beauty."This, my friends, is what the authority have been using to make portals. This, is my army. With this we can cripple the authority,"I tried to process the situation. Finally, I spoke. "How... How does it work?"Charlotte's dad seemed to consider something before answering. Then he spoke "I had to play around with it for a bit. And I am still not entirely sure how this works, but I found out the basic function. If you hold your hand on the top, pressing your palm down flat on the tip of the oval, this happens." He put his palm on the egg-shaped-thingy, and suddenly a blue light pierced the middle of the device, shooting out from the objects center, and casting a beautiful surface light on the wall. The wall displayed a blue outline of an oval, though the wall texture was normal."This, is how you aim and target where you want the portal to go. Then to make it appear, you cup the bottom of the device with your other hand."He wrapped his right hand around the bottom of the egg. Suddenly the streaming blue light emanating from the egg shot out a brilliance of purple, black, and blue, and started filling in the blue circle. In only seconds, there was another beautiful whirling portal, just like the first one I had seen, sitting flat on the wall. Charlotte's Dad, let go of his grip on the egg, and the light shut off, leaving the portal there."Where does it lead to?" Charlotte's mom inquired. Yes, where indeed. I was wondering the same thing."This leads just outside, to the backyard." He said casually.We were flabbergasted. Charlotte's Dad then walked towards the portal, climbed through, and was gone. Seconds later, the back door to the house opened, and he walked back in towards his astounded family and house guest. "How did you-" I couldn't seem to finish the sentence.Charlotte's Dad just laughed. "I figured it out as I was attempting to escape from the authority. All you have to do, is envision with it, where you want to go, and the portal will appear there. The only way it works, though, is if you've physically been there, or seen the place you want to go."For about an hour, we all talked about the machine, experimented with it, and tested it out. What an amazing device it was! So powerful, for one man to control. Now everything made sense. How the authority took power so quickly. With this, we could do amazing things!After a while we all calmed down, and I asked the big question. "So what's the plan?" I gulped."Tomorrow, we are going to free the men and woman, who were captured, with this portal. We will collectively strike against the authority, with this device. It's not a full-proof plan, but I think it will work.""Agreed" we all said.We all needed sleep, after our long day. Charlotte's dad set up sleeping bag for me on a couch in the main room. I rested well that night, though it was hard for me to sleep at first. All I could think about was home, and how I would never run away again. This whole ordeal was really scary to me. I wanted it to be over already.Finally sleep devoured me, like a slowly moving blanket of mystical dreams. I dreamt that night, about home. My sister was drawing, she was always good at art. Mother was making a delicious dinner, and papa was reading the paper. For once, in a long time, I felt really peaceful.Bang! The gun shot was loud, and woke me up instantly. I jumped out of my bed and looked out the window, to see something horrible. There were hundreds of golden guards, all wielding weapons, aimed directly at the house. Charlotte, and her parents instantly came down stairs."What's going on!?" Charlotte's father yelled.I stuttered "They- They're out-s-s-ide. There are way too many of them!"Suddenly a loud booming voice, came from outside. It was amplified, sort of how a megaphone works.The voice was smooth, charming and Cunning. "Now, Now, John. That wasn't very nice of you to steal from me, was it? Here, I'll make you a deal. Come out now, and give me what belongs to me, and I will personally guarantee the safety of your wife and daughter.""He's lying!" I shouted."What do we do!" Charlotte screamed. Charlotte's dad opened the window, and shouted "Go to hell! I will never Mackrond!"He then pulled out the device, and aimed it at the wall. He made a portal."Hurry get in!" He shouted."Where does it go?" I asked. "No time for questions, just get in!" He shouted.I quickly jumped in followed by Charlotte and her parents, just as the authority busted down the door, and started firing their weapons at us."Where are we?" I asked gather my surroundings."King Mackronds Chambers".