is this a great example of narcissim in poetry

my reply 1} con says "This poem sucks. The poem is not a good account of narcissism... This poem is painfully try-hard; it strains to show how self absorbed the subject is. In trying to describe a narcissist, the author creates a caricature. This poem is about what someone trying to write about a narcissist thinks a narcissist is. It is over exaggerated and not at all a "great account" of a narcissist. Contrast this poem to a work like "A portrait of Dorian Grey," where narcissism is subtly and realistically conveyed." the lines "I glory in the adoration of me into this mirrored glass I see the beauty of I blue-black eyebrows curved dark bows that shoot the arrows of love of the eyes for I eyelashes blue-black wings myriad cilia fibrous filaments twin fans to flutter forth the sighs of the eyes for I " clearly convey narcissism not subtly like in "A portrait of Dorian Grey," but like a sledge hammer 2) con ys "I will respond to Con line-by-line: "lightfalls of jet black ink to flutter like black frost o"er me slivers of light dancing interfused like a curtain of black gauze" now you see the slivers of light refer to the "lightfalls of jet black ink to flutter like black frost " Ok so how how can something "jet black" be a "lightfall?" Light is the exact opposite of jet black. This is classic mixed metaphor- a trademark of bad writing." Frost doesn"t flutter- frost develops on stationary objects over night. Even if "slivers of light" refers to a "lightfall of jet black," the line makes no sense. So this lightfall is black like gauze? I have never seen a black light that looked like or reminded me of gauze. I have no idea what image the author is trying to convey. Is it a shimmering black object? Because gauze is not shimmer-y. This poetry is awful. the image is vivid and lurid it is the image of black light- dancing something to get your mind around I can"t get my mind around it because it is stupid. What is black light? Are you talking about the purple light that makes things look neon? Is that the dancing light?" reply he says "how can something "jet black" be a "lightfall? " this is a surrealist poem the "light fall" refer to the black curls of the girls hair which look like splinters of black light and all together look like a lightfall play on waterfall con says "What is black light? black light is the color of the girls black hair which is like black light con has completely missed the surrealism and e poem itself con has not understood the poem if a surrealist poet had written the poem con would just go along with it and not call the surrealist imagry "stupid" but because dean wrote it all con can sys is "I can"t get my mind around it because it is stupid" 3) con says "Listen dude, people share their poetry on this website all the time. Just be honest about it- don"t be slimy and try to trick people into thinking your stuff is good. Post it honestly and engage in actual discussion about your work. Iimprove your " reply con says "Post it honestly and engage in actual discussion" that is exactly what I have done fact is con does not like the posts/poems so he just trys and bag my debates But if you act like a self-important skeezball don"t be surprised when people treat you like one.