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VICTORIA Victoria quickly put on her black sweatshirt, feeling all sorts of emotions. Mainly, Excited and anticipated, but also a bit nervous. She walked into her bathroom, and gave herself a steady glance in the mirror. She was ready. 'Now all their is to do, is to wait for Dennis to come' thought Victoria in-patiently. She paced her room, silently for a few minutes minutes, before finally sitting on the edge of her bed. Although she was glad to have her parents gone for the weekend, she couldn't help but to feel lonely at the same time. Normally she would have agreed to go with them for their short vacation, but she knew that this would be probably the only chance she would get to get out of the house. She needed to stay. She walked across her small upstairs bedroom, to her window. Moonlight filled the room, as Victoria opened up the blinds. Eager to leave, Victoria pulled out her cell phone and quickly dialed Dennis's number. Dennis answered on the third ring. "Hello?" Came Dennis's hasty voice over the phone. "What's taking you so long? I'm ready to go!" Urged Victoria angrily. "Calm yourself. I just got here." Replied Dennis casually. Victoria looked out the window to see that, sure enough, Dennis had arrived on her front lawn wearing all dark clothing. "Alright stay there. I'll be right out." Victoria snapped her phone shut, and pulled her shoes on. She went to her bathroom one last time and checked herself in the mirror. Her eyes were wide with excitement, as she never got out much with her parents around. She then hurried out the door to go meet Dennis. DENNIS Dennis watched as Victoria quickly left her house, slamming the door behind her. "Did you have to shut that so hard? I wouldn't be surprised if the whole neighborhood is awake now!" Dennis said slightly vexed. "Oh, stop being a baby. This was your idea, remember? Do you have the video camera?" Asked Victoria, as her and Dennis started walking down their silent street. "Of course!" Dennis snapped, again a little more peeved. 'Did she really think i am stupid enough to leave the one thing that the whole bet was based on?' Dennis thought to himself. " I can't wait to see the angry look on Beth's face when she finds out we really snuck into that house. This is going to be an easy win. I mean how hard is it to just walk in a house that's not even uccupied half the time? I bet that old man won't even be at his house." Victoria said as they passed the first few houses towards their destination. " Yeah, i guess we'll see..." Said Dennis looking down at the ground. "What's wong Denny? Yesterday you were all pumped for this. Now your all mopey, and irritated. I'ts not like you." Dennis turned to look at his best friend. "Yeah, i know. I am sorry. I just feel bad about lying to my parents." "your such a goody goody!" Victoria said, then punched Dennis lightly in the shoulder. "Besides, not telling, is different from lying. Your parents are in Mexico for the weekend! You should enjoy your freedom!" Dennis sighed. "I guess you're right. Let's go see how 'scary' this house supposedly is." In less than a few minutes, the two teenagers found themselves standing in front of the eerie house. The house looked to be about 2000 sq. feet, with two windows in the front top level, adjacently spaced about 15 feet apart. The front yard, was full of dead grass, and trash from kids walking home from school seeing the ugly yard, and finding it fit to leave their wastes in it. The two could see that that there was no car parked in the driveway. This was a good sign. "You go first" said Victoria, suddenly quiet. "Don't be scared, he's not even here." Dennis chuckled. "I'm not scared!" Victoria defended, with hurt pride. "Relax i was kidding! Let's go, you girly girl." Dennis teased as he started up to few steps to the front door. Ignoring the comment, Victoria followed close behind. Dennis knew that Victoria was really quite the opposite. Victoria wasn't the type of girl, who obsessed over looks, even though most of though most of the guys that knew her already thought her to be quite attractive. She was slender, had strawberry blonde hair, and bright blue eyes. But she loved being outdoors, playing sports, getting dirty, and doing things that were generally considered "un-proper" for a girl. That was the main reason Dennis got along with her so well. She wan't like the rest of the girls he knew. She was different, in a good sense, and they had been friends since childhood. Dennis remembered when he first met his now best friend at age five, playing in 'Meadow Breeze park' so long ago. Now, nine years later, they had been able to maintain that same friendhip. Dennis approached the door to the eerie house, slowly. "Well go ahead, open it Denny!" whispered Victoria impatiently. Dennis reached toward the handle and turned it, without much luck. "It's locked." Dennis said dissapointedly. "Duh! Come on let's go in through the back." Victoria and Dennis then rushed off to the side fence of the house. The fence looked really old and fragile, Dennis thought. Victoria looked at the old creaky fence un-easily. Then she exchanged the expression to one of determination, saying " I am smaller. Help me up first please" Dennis knelt down, to allow Victoria to step on his back. Victoria grunted, as she hoisted herself up and over the fence. The fence creaked loudly as she jumped off of it, to the other side. Dennis wondered if the fence would hold his weight, and decided that the idea was very unlikely. "Hurry up, slow poke! Ew, this yard is disgusting." Victoria whispered through the fence. Dennis took the camera out of his hoodie pocket, so as not to smash it. With one good jump, Dennis managed to hook both his elbows over the top of the fence. Next, he pulled his legs up to the top of the fence. As Dennis pulled, he realized his left pant leg, was caught on a stray wood chip protruding from the fence. His weight pulled him off the top, tearing the fabric of his his black sweats, as he fell on his butt, much to the amusement of Victoria. "Shut up" Dennis told the girl, who was giggling quietly. "Smooth move!" Victoria said as she helped brushed the dirt off his back. The two teens walked a little faster through the dirty back yard to get to the back door. Victoria shivered as they passed a creepy looking rusted, shed in the corner of the yard. " I bet he keeps dead bodies in there!" Dennis said. The backyard was much like the front yard, filled with dead grass, and other unkept things. The two proceeded to the door, hoping that it would be unlocked. Dennis tried the knob and found himself appeased to find it unlocked. "I am going to start recording now" he told Victoria. Both teens walked in the house. Everything in this house reminded Dennis of all the ones in those scary movies. The place literally looked like it had been un-inhabited for decades! Almost as soon as they had walked in, they were surprised to see two bright headlights through the front window. "crap the owner is here!" Dennis started to panic. "Dang! Now what!?" Victoria exclaimed now, very frightened. "Hurry, in this closet!" Dennis pointed to another door. The two rushed to the closet, and crammed themselves inside the small place. They listen intensely, as they heard the door open, followed by heavy footsteps. TO BE CONTINUED BY VI_VERI..... ------------ PROBLEM: The two teens are trapped in the house with the owner without and must escape. ADDED CHARACTER: Old man (owner of house) [1] ADDED SETTING: Creepy house [1] Just a re-clarification for my opponent and my readers, the first section of this story contains a problem. It is the opponents job, to fix the said problem in her writing, and propose a new problem for me to fix. This will happen in each round. I would like to appolagize for any lack of detail, due to character limitations. -philosopical