Story Writing Debate

Chapter 3: Clumsy Card HouseMy head was spinning, as I tried to break down everything I have seen in the past few hours. Everything was so new... So different... I had no idea where I was, and everything these crazy people were telling me was just frightening me more and more.Fight? I am not a fighter. I am just a curious little boy who got in over my head. I felt like I was going to pass out.I sat down on a patch of soft grass, and looked off into the distance."What's wrong?" Charlotte asked, than sat down next to me curiously. I didn't answer, but decided to take in my surroundings for the first time. As I had noticed briefly earlier, the full gravity of the color this place was filled with, had finally reached me. Everything was bright, and extravagant! The beauty was overwhelming, and almost made me feel a bit nauseous as I stared at my surrounding. There were few trees, that I could see. I had no memory of where the tree I had entered from was, unfortunately. That's the one I needed to find. I needed to get out of this place. For all I know I was still dreaming, and would once again wake up scared and alone inside that horrible dark Forrest. I shuddered at the thought.Charlotte cleared her throat, trying to get my attention. "Excuse me! I said 'what's wrong?!'" I sighed. "Charlotte, I wanna go home. I don't know where I am. I am not from here. I just got lost, that's all. My parents are probably really worried about me. I am sorry, but I don't think I can help you fight this 'authority' or whoever they are. I have my own family to worry about."With that, I got up, getting ready to go the direction I thought I remembered coming from the portal. Suddenly Charlotte's lip started to quiver, and I could see tears well up on the corners of her eyes."You mean... You aren't going to help me?" She whispered in shock."No Charlotte I am really sorry. You should get back to your daddy before he-"Charlotte cut me off, suddenly angry."Before he what? Loses the last thing he has left?""No! I wasn't going to say that. Charlotte listen-""Whatever, I don't need your help anyway!" She screamed, and then ran away in the opposite direction. I facepalmed, and then tried to let myself release my stress."Charlotte wait!" I shouted, but it was too late. The girl was already gone. I decided it was best if I just let it go. There was nothing I could do now.I ventured off into the strange new world, for a few hours, taking in everything I saw, as I tried to search for that mysterious blue oval that had brought me here to begin with. I pass through a big field, with the long grass as tall as my waste. As the wind blew across the plains, the flow of the grass was absolutely amazing and beautiful. The sight was completely awesome. As I walked, I couldn't help but feel a bit guilty for ditching Charlotte like that. But then my pride piqued up. It's not like I asked her to come with me. This isn't my problem.Even as I made the arguments mentally, I felt bad for thinking them. The girl had lost her mother, and I could see perfectly how she would want to stop the authority just as much as anyone would. But that didn't change the fact that I still had to get back to my home, and my family. I decided I would do whatever it took to get home. With a new found determination, I pressed on forward through the grass, into the unknown. It was time to go home.I finally cleared the field, and started to think I was getting lost again, when I saw a recognizable bush. I had remembered it on the walk there, because it was shaped funny, and looked like a big clown nose. I must be getting close, I thought as I pressed forward through a thicket.Things slowly, but surely were starting to seem more familiar as went forward. I knew I would be there soon. Suddenly, I saw something, and my heart skipped a beat. On the ground about 20 feet from where I stood, was a pink walkie talkie. It was surrounded by foot prints. One small pair, and several very large pairs.Oh no... I had no idea what had happened, but whatever it was, it didn't look good. I quickly rushed over and picked up the device, and put it in my pocket."Charlotte!?" I shouted into the distance. There was no answer. "HEY CHARLOTTE! You dropped you walkie talkie!" I shouted out towards nothing.I waited a few seconds, again no answer.Every bone in my body wanted to just leave. To just be oblivious to the situation, and go home through the portal that I new was nearby.Why should I care, I barely even know this girl!Despite my eagerness to resist, however, I knew it was pointless. I begrudgingly, followed the tracks, hoping to find Charlotte. The tracks went on for a while. After about a mile and a half, the tracks ended. I was about to give up, when I saw it.It was huge, magnificent, and utterly amazing. The Huge golden city, was astonishing, and possibly one of the biggest things' I had ever seen!I followed the road down towards the gates of the stone walls surrounding the city, not knowing what to do. Just then I heard some voices, and instantly ducked down behind some brush against the side of the city wall. I looked over the brush and my eyes widened. There were three big men in Red tunics carrying Charlotte over to the gates of the city. Charlotte, was screaming and pulling against them. "Lemme go! Let me GOOO! You big meanies!" Charlotte yelled as she attempted to bite and kick her captors, who seemed to be rather un-affected.I didn't know what to do. Should I stand up and scream for them to let her go? I sized up the three men holding her, and quickly changed my mind. They were all much bigger than me, and just one of them would easily crush my tiny body if he so wished. Better stand my ground, I decided.The three soldiers carried the girl over to a big gate. Two more soldiers peered out from a hole in the gate, and opened the gate. Can this get any weirder?"We've got her!" Said one of the soldiers to the soldier behind the gate."I see that. The authority will be pleased." Replied the guard.Then he opened the gate and allowed them in. After they were inside the city, the gate closed with a loud bang and a shutter. Dang. They have Charlotte! I need to help her!I located a tree nearby the wall. I had always been an excellent climber, and the tree was the perfect height for me to jump directly onto the top if the wall if I decided to jump over. I climbed the tree in a matter of minutes, and hopped over the parapets on the walls, adrenaline pumped as I was ready to do god knows what.The city was just as magnificent inside as it was outside. I made sure to stay hidden with a low silhouette in order not to be seen. There were thousands of people in the streets. I felt amazed to see so many people, in one place. There were markets, there were homes, there were children. It was just like a city from where I came from!"Gather round! Gather Round!" Shouted someone. Just then the three soldiers holding Charlotte walked out into the middle of the central part of the seat. All the citizens back away from the soldiers in fear, as they noticed the Red tunics. The people did as they were bid, and mulled around the guards who were now the center of attention."Today, is a great day! The authority has chosen another one, to fulfill our journey!" The crowd boo'ed at the soldiers, obviously hateful towards them."Leave her alone! She's just a little girl!" Shouted someone from the crown. Others chimed in and agreed. "It's too late. It's time for her now, the authority will see her." Said the lead soldier.I had do something. But what?Just then something horrible happened. The walkie talkie went off, as Charlotte's father shouted through it "Charlotte? Charlotte where are you?"I instantly pressed the 'off' button to silence it. But it was too late. Everyone in the square including the guards were staring directly at me.