a pitch/vocabulary visual for tone setting I understand, but, it really should have a hyphen inbetween. --This was a long narrative over the hunting of this animal. Some may want to have had this animal killed after all the talk, for him to have earned his reward, but, it gave us insight as to why he did not and learned more about his personality. So, good job! However, you might get feedback to cut this down a bit. Dunno, we'll have to wait for other feedback to accumulate. --All names are apropo for the time and setting. The voice is strong. Good job! --I find it a great idea to have him talk with himself, breaking the monotone voice to enhance another level of tone and vibe to this section. --Great visual here: "The staffin Inn..." Perfect scene break too. --The dialog is true to the scene and opens more avenues as to the direction this will travel. Careful with too much overuse of Gaelic. Beathan responses or others in the scene will have to answer accordingly, so as to keep a reader informed as to the passage of info. In other words, don't get a reader lost. Not everyone knows this language and to read for enjoyment is great, but not have to search a foreign dictionary. --Here is the mention of the iron shoe to ward off the unholy. Great passage of info for readers. And I am really thinking if this comes too late in the story.