easy to achieve. I can't come up with anything negative to say about this other than that the prologue is too long to be a prologue, but that's personal preference and might not matter once this is in print (reading long chapters on the computer is very tiring). So well done and keep it up! This is obviously a very intelligent piece of writing. I like the poetic imagery of the prologue and although I found it a little slow paced without the incentive of enough information to know what is actually going on at first. However, the plot reveals itself eventually and is adequately engaging. I would have liked a little more clarification on the nature and appearance of the characters as well as the well described surroundings although I assume this is fed in later and has been left out to conceal some secret or plot twist? I can see in some places why you have used foot notes to further explain but I found this disjointed the story and the whole experience felt laboured as if I was researching a project rather that immersing myself in a story. I am not entirely sure what to make of what comes next. I find myself wondering if all this prelude is entirely necessary? Also, the disclaimer that the characters in the most part bear no resemblance to the real people confused me. Why share a name with them then? I also find the use of slightly altered real place